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Creator of the Doduo Alliance
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Somewhere beyond the Nexus
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Chapter 4: A Troubling Night

Hi there, Shini! I didn't want to keep you waiting, so I directed a bunch of energy back your way here in the form of my next review! I think I might have improved my overall review style (at least a little maybe?) and hope you like it!

The sunlight had shone onto the dense grove of trees, having cast short shadows below them.
Alright, so it's around mid-day.

A small Pidgey had perched on a tree branch, his head tilting to the left and gazing at the human under him.

The human was about eight times his height and wore a white coat that reached its knees. The human's glasses glinted in the afternoon sun, a clipboard and a strange rectangular object in its hands. "Unique Specimen has been adequately trained. Proceed to send in the newborns for the next batch of trainers as per protocols."
A professor of some kind it seems. I wonder what the object is? Seems to be a professor of a standard region. Sounds like they are talking about starter Pokemon.

The ball opened with a red burst of energy, and a strange yellow bipedal fox Pokémon took shape. The human commanded the Pokémon before vanishing in a blip of light.
The human vanished or the Pokemon? It sounds like it was the human! Teleportation?

Having no idea what had happened, he stood there, blinking owlishly and looking at his surroundings for a little while.

Days and weeks passed by, and he was flying over the tall grass of the field and into a geometrically perfect line of trees.
I like how this orchard is described. The Pidgey wouldn't have a word for it. Nice touch!

He had seen others of his kind around, but he didn't care much for them. There had also been some young humans that had gone by the route and fought some of the Pidgeys, and because of how the humans interacted with them, he figured it was better to hide than to confront the bloodthirsty trainers.
Makes me wonder why all Pokemon aren't this careful. :eyes:

He perched on a tree, one that he frequented, and took some time to clean his feathers and maintain his perfect physique. The coat-wearing human had always said his body was well beyond the others, even going as far as to say he was perfect at times.
Either this Pidgey has some amazing IV's or maybe its a shiny?

Sounds of rustling leaves alerted him and he caught a blur of brown at the corner of his eyes. He quickly took his beak off his wing and scanned his surroundings, a wary look in his eyes.

A long silent minute of worry crept onto his spine, his talons carrying him backwards and into something warm and feathery.

He jumped. A startled yelp escaping his beak as he quickly turned around.

A Pidgey stood there, snickering to herself. "Got 'cha, didn't I?"

He clutched his chest, taking in deep breaths to calm his racing heart. He recovered and faced the other Pidgey, snarling at her. "What was that for?"

The Pidgey spoke between snickers. "Just something to lighten up that pompous ass of yours."
Ah so the male Pidgey IS happy to hear its body is perfect. That could certainly cause him to appear pompous! This female Pidgey certainly seems to be a handful though!

"Pompous what?"

The Pidgey stopped laughing and gained a look of realization. "Oh, I getcha'. You're from that section. No wonder you're so unlike the others. You got a name here, or should I start calling you Short Stuff, Short Stuff?"
So... I don't know if you like using italics to emphasize words, but if you were to do it as "You're from that section." I think it might give you more of what you are trying to do here. No idea if that is something you might do though. If so, just let me know and I can have a separate section to point out opportunities for that if you want. Mostly, I just wanted to communicate here that I am willing to do that if it's something you find value in.

Female Pidgey is so sassy! :mewlulz:

"Mine didn't exactly have a yellow Pokémon, but yeah. They didn't seem to care whenever I tried asking them questions. Don't know if they could understand me but, heheh you wouldn't believe how pissed off he was when I stuffed some dirt down his pants." She giggled. "It was hilarious."
What a little rascal! :mewlulz:

He tilted his head, appalled at her actions as a concerned look crept onto his face. "Weren't you afraid they would shock you?"

"I try not to worry about it." She shrugged. "You can call me Prance by the way. Came up with it myself." She held her head high, her eyes narrowing with a smirk. She chuckled, shrugging as she sighed. "Though I'll probably have to change it when I get captured by a human."
This makes getting caught sort of sad, but it certainly provides some depth!

Captured? Why on earth would she… "What does that mean exactly?"
Ah, so you do use at least some italics! I hadn't noticed if you had before because I haven't been looking for it.

"Hm? Oh yeah, it's those red balls, pokéballs or something, they turn us into energy or something… Didn't the human tell you about 'em?"

The colors drained off his face as he recalled the device. "Oh… so that's what they're called."

Prance nodded. "I've been looking for someone to catch me with one of 'em but–" She shrugged. "–they were a bit too weak for my taste."
Well, Prance probably seems crazy to the other Pidgey now if she didn't already... :eyes:

"Wait, why would anyone want to live in someplace so small? Don't you want to have the skies all to yourself instead of staying in a small cramped space?"

"Eh." Prance shrugged. "I think that's a good price to pay for guaranteed strength."
Hmm I wonder what she is basing that 'guaranteed strength' on? Leveling up by battling? Accumulation of Effort Values?

Strength… She wanted to be someone's pet for more power?
Well Mr. male pidgey, there are certainly weirder reasons to become pets in the world...

He shook his head. "I don't think I want to have anything to do with humans."

"Well, tough luck, Short Stuff. You'll barely survive till next year if you don't have a trainer. Many Pidgeys and Rattatas around here will be killed or sent to a breeding centre if you don't get captured by a human."
Wow I caught a spelling error! In this fic, its almost like catching a shiny Pokemon in the wild!
Breeding center.

Killed?! Dang that's dramatic! I also assume there is truth behind it! I wonder what IS Prance worried about ending them?

"What?" He couldn't believe what he was hearing. Being killed and used as a breeding machine just because he didn't want to be a human's pet. How does Prance know this?
That's exactly what I'M thinking too, Short Stuff. Come to think of it, I'll just start calling you Stuffy. Stuffy, the feather-dirt slayer. 😜

"Yup." She nodded. "I barely survived last year when I saw them coming. Being a human's pet is so much easier than trying to survive in the wild, there's no food around here and we can't last more than a year without proper nutrition. Plus, I could get so much stronger if I had a human. Would be nice to be on top of something for once." Prance then pointed a wing behind him. "Oh look, there's one right now! See ya!"

Prance took off, leaving him alone to ponder over her words.
Wow this is a lot for Stuffy to process. And who the heck is THEM? :copyka:

If I don't find a human, I'll die… But he didn't want to be bound to someone, he wanted to be free, to soar above the clouds and see the world.

But was it worth dying for?

Days passed and he spent the majority of the daylight dodging any fights and capture from the small humans. It was when the sun was setting, did he see her again.
Like the threat she warned of, I think her being around will be helping to motivate Stuffy.

The Pidgey, Prance fluttered down, a smirk on her face. “Yo! How's it hanging, Short Stuff. I love what you've done with the place!” His face was blank, not a hint of the annoyance he was feeling showing when he saw her ‘admiring’ his perch. “Wide, open and an amazing view of the sky. Of course, it's nowhere near as awesome and roomy as my branch but it comes as a very close second place.”
Prance may be a little stinker, but her bugging him seems to show she cares underneath her sassy facade. :unquag:

Alright Prance, I like you... as long as you don't stuff dirt down my pants... :eyes:

He spun around, trying to ignore her.

She flew closer to him, blocking his view of the field. “So!” She spread her wings wide open. “Got your eye on someone yet? ‘cause I certainly got mine on one.” The grin on her face twitched until she broke down into laughter. “Oh who am I kidding. Everyone here’s too weak for someone like moi.”
Well! Prance is one to talk regarding pompousness!

I wonder if this is going to be a backstory to the Perry the Pigeot from the previous chapter?

No idea what's going on in terms of where this is in the plot yet, but as with other chapters, I have learned patience is rewarded. Plus, I'm enjoying the interaction between Stuffy and Prance and the intrigue of the ominous threat that looms.

Good job at making it easy to set the rest of the plot aside for this section so far!

He stared at the Pidgey in front of him, his eyes twitching in annoyance at the proudness radiating from her. “What do you want?” he said.
Spell check says proudness is wrong. Not sure if you intended it to be that way, but if not, probably switch it for pride.

“Nothin’ much.” She admitted with a wink. “Just wanted to talk, y’know. Your face was all gloomy and doomy and you're out here all alone! Life’s too short to not enjoy it with other people!” she exclaimed before her expression took on a more mischievous note. “And speaking of short…”
She's up to something! :eyes:

Gloomy and doomy? She really thought he could act like nothing had happened after the revelation she dropped on him. How was he supposed to react? Happily waiting to be trapped in those pokéballs? He’d rather take to the skies and bask in freedom regardless of the pain.
Such a good contrast for Prance. I'm getting romantic partner vibes from these two birds. :veelove:

A mass of feathers covered his vision and he flinched, the teasing look in Prance’s eyes filling his sight. “Tag! You're it!” She poked him with a wing and fled, leaving him in a state of confusion.
But what does that have to do with short?! Unless that was Prance's plan all along: to sow the seeds of confusion before she struck! :wowzard:

She returned moments later when he didn't make any movement.

“You're supposed to chase me, y’know,” she said, flying back down and returning to her perch.

“...why would I do that?”

“It’s a game I saw from my travels… probably one of the few good things I learned…” she muttered under her breath before shaking her head. “You're supposed to chase me, then I chase you, then you chase me again… Come on, try it! I can guarantee it'll be loads of fun!”

“That sounds like a waste of energy,” he said as blunt as the branch they were on.
Wasting energy may seem like Stuffy is just being stuffy, but Prance mentioned a food shortage, so he HAS a point there.

“Nothing’s a waste if you enjoy yourself!” A sincere smile was on her face, she sounded like she truly believed that. “Come on, give it a go!”
Words of wisdom. Well said, Prance! :quag:

It only took a few moments for his composure to falter and he relented. “Alright. Fine, let's play. But, don't come whining about it if I get you more than you do.”

“Hah! That's the spirit!”

Weeks passed by, he and Prance met a few more times during this period. They sometimes played games she found from her travels, other times they chatted; Prance mostly talked and laughed about how weak everyone who came to this place was.

And while he wouldn't admit it verbally, lest he gave her another topic to tease him about, he had been enjoying their little interactions, it was fun having another Pokémon around.
Seeing them keep each other company gives such a nice feel-good vibe in contrast with the looming threat.

I'm seriously loving this chapter so far even though it has absolutely no tie in to the rest of the fic that I can confidently identify yet.

I'm pretty sure something bad is about to happen though, now that you have got me to care about these two birds... :sadwott:

On one starry night as he sat perched on a branch, scratching his talons against the bark of the tree and carving a small portrait of a pokéball. He focused on the bark, his eyes screwing up and his mind wandering. Freedom… is it really worth it? He grimaced, a wing hovering over his stomach. Maybe Prance has the right idea.

His mind wandered over to the female Pidgey, memories of her talons fidgeting and wings fluttering along with her laughing wholeheartedly at her own stupid jokes came to his mind.

He wondered why it was easier to remember her when he had met dozens of other Pidgeys in the past month.
Ooo! Is this when he figures out his feelings for her? :eyes:

Maybe it was the way she laughed, or how her feathers ruffled in delight when he pronounced his annoyance to her. Maybe…

A name… she has a name… he reasoned, shaking his head as his stare intensified. But do… Do I want one? Would it… would it serve any purpose? What… what could I use? Do names have to mean something?
Stuffy! Thy name is Stuffy! :screm:

A tap on his shoulder brought him back to reality. He turned around and saw Prance with two small round objects in her beak.

"Yo, ya' done with your brooding yet? I found these when a trainer got beaten by a Rattata," she said, snorting a bit. "I know, losing to a Rattata, how weak can you be?"
Calling it now, the last boss will somehow be a Rattata. :eyes:

She placed one of the orbs in front of him and he stared at it blankly, not sure what it even was.

Prance noticed his expression and said, "Never seen an Oran Berry before? They're some pretty good stuff."

She chewed and swallowed the fruit, expelling a breath of satisfaction. "Nothing like a good berry to keep me going. Just imagine all the berries I could eat if I got a human."

She frowned, noticing the Pidgey still staring at his food with a blank look. "Hey, you alright? If-if you don't like it, I could go find something else for you–"

"Why?"

Prance raised a brow. "Why what?"

"Why do you deal with me? Why do you talk to me? I can't even remember any of the Pidgeys around here but you, you still remember me… I… don't even know my parents. I-I don't know if I have any siblings… or whether anyone here's one of them or if they're dead or–"

Prance placed a wing on him, cutting him off with a gentle pat. "Hey, it's alright. You're alright. I don't know my parents either so I know how you feel. It's okay to feel like this like you're all alone in a large world controlled by monsters. It's okay to feel these emotions, you're still young. We all are."
Ok I was NOT expecting to almost cry. What the CRAP Shini! :copyka:

She walked away with a sigh, her eyes staring into the sky with a look of longing. "... I've spent a long time… a long long time trying… I've spent so much of my life searching for my purpose, chasing my dreams, my ideals… and yet…” Her head lowered, her voice trembling. “It hurt so much. The loneliness, the hunger, the pain. I thought I was above it all, above the suffering my freedom caused me…”

She whimpered, a tear trailing down her cheek. “... no one should ever experience that. No one should ever see what I saw… It's why I try. I tried so damn hard to help them, help them find their trainers, find their purpose in life.” She took in a breath, a bitter chuckle escaping her. “Most never make it past their first month and… others had merely forgotten about me." She chuckled bitterly. "It's kinda why I gave myself a name. I wanted to make other Pokémon remember me, to make them know me, to let them know what they shouldn't be like. I wanted them to know that they're not alone, that their world can be so much more than just death and battles even… even if you have to give up your freedom for comfort, for love. For a chance to be the best."
Shini, this chapter is gold so far...

Seeing this kind of stuff makes me think you will probably enjoy more of my fic in later chapters of it. I so badly want to say more, but I refuse to spoil things.

She paused, looking back at him with a timid frown. Her legs took her back to his side, she grabbed him by the shoulders and stared straight into his eyes, a tired sigh escaping her beak. "Look, Short Stuff… I actually had many chances to leave and never look back but you… you reminded me of myself… when I was confused, young, stupid and so full of myself. I thought I could take on the world without a trainer, to continue a life with my freedom but…"

He felt something wet dripping onto him and her body shaking against his. Prance took in a breath, her voice shaky. "But it… it only gave me pain… there's nowhere that the humans haven't taken control of. You need to remove that selfish idea that you could make a difference, that you could live on without help… please, for your sake and… for my sake, please don't leave… don't waste your life chasing freedom when it'll only bring you pain… Don't make the same mistake I made."

Her sniffles grazed his hearing. She wept on his shoulder, causing him to flinch and making his heart weep in return.

He took in a breath, now understanding why she did this. He understood now that he had to do this, he had to tell her. "Perry… Prance, call me Perry."
Ok 'Perry' but from now on I'm still calling you Stuffy! :mewlulz:

This is a great flashback chapter. I love how it provides so much more essence to Perry-who-shall-only-be-Stuffy-going-forward.

She glanced at him, her bleary eyes making him pause but he proceeded regardless.

"And… and I can't do something like that, Prance. I… I don't want to live a life where I'm a pet… a slave to their whims… I want to fly around the world… see everything… experience the dangers myself… I will not be bound… I won't be bound by fear."
Well... at least until Crude shows up anyway. Nice while it lasted though! You built up a great life over the years it seems, Stuffy!

Prance sighed, wiping her tears away with a wing. "I see… if that's what you really want… then I'm sorry… I'm sorry I couldn't make you understand…”

Perry flinched, feeling the words stabbing through him as he watched her leave.
Stuffy, you may not realize it right now, or maybe you do, but she is the love of your life and is about to leave. You can't let things end like this... :sadwott:

He took in a breath as he leaned against the tree. He plucked some nearby leaves and created a makeshift blanket, emptying his mind and trying to lull himself to sleep.

The silence of the night did nothing to quell her words and tears. They echoed endlessly in his mind, making him squirm uncomfortably as his mind drifted into a dreamless rest.

The moon gave way to the sun as it shone down on the sleeping Pidgey.
Darn it Stuffy! You had ONE job!! :screm:

He woke up to a loud voice screaming, "Pidgey, use Gust!"

The sounds of winds whipping alerted him, his body taking off before his mind could comprehend those words.

The tree branch he was previously on was shredded to pieces, and he whipped his head around, staring at something that hit him like a punch to the gut.

The Pidgey that flew opposite of him was familiar and he couldn't believe his eyes. He didn't want to believe them.

Prance hovered opposite of him, her hazel eyes narrowed and glaring at him.
Nooo! Prance! WHY?! :letsgorb:

But… but there was something wrong with her. There was no humour in her eyes, no sadness, no anger, nothing.
Spelling should be: humor

Not even an acknowledged look.

Her eyes were glazed over like she wasn't even focusing on him.
Ok so what was all that crap about how Pokeball's aren't a form of mind control? It BLOODY-WELL looks that way to me here!! :screm:

Well! I think this is about to inspire some INTENSE character development!

"Quick Attack!"

He glanced down, seeing a male human child pointing a finger at him. That action distracted him and he took the attack head-on.

He staggered as Prance flew back, her eyes still unfocused and her breath steady.

Perry recovered mid-air, regaining his altitude as he shouted at her, "Prance, it's me, Perry! Why-why are you attacking me?"

She didn't respond, it was like she didn't even hear him.

"Prance, I'm sorry! I'm sorry for leaving you! Please stop, I don't want to hurt you!"

"Quick Attack again!" the child shouted.

She blurred forward, crashing into him with her beak.

A shot of pain went through him as he came to a cold realization. Something happened to her… was it the human? Did they do something to her?

Perry tumbled to the ground, his breaths slow and heavy. He took off much slower than before and hollered, "Prance, snap out of it! Please! I don't want to hurt you!"

But she didn't stop, she charged at him, breath steady and eyes emotionless as the human called out more commands.
Something big is about to happen. I can feel it.

Perry grimaced, dodging the oncoming attacks with surprising ease. Why is she so slow? She was nowhere near this slow when we played...

He flew higher into the sky, watching in surprise when she stopped her attacks and gazed everywhere but up.

Why is she doing this? Did our time together mean nothing? Perry shook his head. No, she was too genuine to be faking that. Something must've–

A flash of his crudely made Poké ball came to his mind.

"There was nothing around that the humans haven't taken control of."

The pokéball, it did something to her but what? How did it make her like this? She's… she's like a mindless animal.
How ironic. To humans, Pokemon appear the opposite when wild vs caught.

Perry glanced down, noticing that she was still looking around aimlessly.

He dropped his head, a tear dropping from his eye as he flew further into the sky. I'm sorry, Prance. I'm sorry I made you think I didn't care… I'll… I'll find a way to help you, to save you, no matter what. Just wait for me, Prance.

"Wait for me…" He had stared back at the shrinking land, his shoulders having felt much heavier as he flew.
But what can you possibly do now? You should have stopped her Stuffy... :sadwott:



The basalt floor cracked and broke beneath his talons. Perry shook his head, growling at the man in front of them.

"Wise choice," Crude said, curling his hand up as the biggest Pokémon in the portal became enshrouded in a purple glow.
NOW we time travel?! Nooo! What happened to Prance!? You play dirty, Shini...

The Pokémon around the blue bird cried out in shock as she disappeared in a flash of light.

The Swellow squawked in surprise, suddenly appearing in front of them. Stirring and groaning, her eyes groggily looked around her before she spotted the two birds. "Perry? Rower? Wh-what's going on? Where's– the human! Perry, we must–"

"No, Sil. We can't." Perry grimaced, loathed as he may, he couldn't let her attempt a fight she couldn't win. "This… this thing isn't a normal human. He–you've seen what he did to the village. We can't–"

Sil shook her head, wings spread in shock. "Excuse me? Are you just gonna give up? He has our friends in there!" Perry took care to avoid her glare, causing the Swellow to moan out in frustration. She turned around and if looks could kill, Crude would be dead well over three times. "You! Release our citizens!"

Crude lazily gazed at the Swellow, a hand rubbing his chin. "Nah, I don't think I will. Need something to satiate my boredom after all." He tilted his head, dodging a blue bird-shaped flame. Then he leaned forward, evading a wing that gleamed like metal. Snapping his fingers, he froze her in place, regarding her shocked gasp with an annoyed glance. "Look, if you really want the others to be free. You just have to do a little thingy for me, 'mkay? That sounds fair, doesn't it?"
This scene definitely helps to portray Crude as an invincible villain since I doubt even Stuffy would fair any better against him...

"You reckless imbecile!" Rower hissed before Perry slipped through his grasp and started charging towards the man with murder in his eyes. "Not you too," he groaned.

"Sil!" Perry rushed forward without a second thought, his talons out and wings spread, Perry charged the man at speeds faster than the human eye could perceive. Winds kicked, sharp and quick rushing at the man.
Well. This is going to suck. For Stuffy... :sadwott:

The man, however, didn't move, not looking phased by his attack as the same smirk continued to stretch across his face. It irked Perry when the man allowed the winds to hit with naught but a passing glance. Dust clouded his vision before suddenly, a hand reached out, grabbing Perry by the neck and slamming him into the ground with more force than necessary to subdue the Pidgeot.

His back roared in pain, rocks scraped against his back, tearing off some feathers. But Perry didn't let the pain slow his wrath as he pushed through, slashing and tearing at the man's arms and for a moment, he was sure he was cutting off bits of flesh.

But like before, all he did was delay the inevitable.

An amused chuckle was the last thing he heard before he felt himself flying into the wall at sound-breaking speeds with the surface, somehow, still in perfect condition. Stirring in agony, Perry fell onto the ground with a heavy thud, breathing heavily with an eye shut tight and blood dripping down his head.

The pain didn't last long however as he heard the man snap his fingers once more and the injuries on Perry's body healed themselves, flesh stitching and sewing back together, bones mending, and feathers regrowing.
Darn it Stuffy... you had one job... :sadwott:

I'm wondering why Crude even bothers to get others to do things for him. It seems it would be easier for him to just do it all himself. Perhaps his powers are limited in some way that have yet to be displayed?

"Heh heh, an impressive display of bravado, my little birdies," Crude said, checking his nails and absolutely relishing in their pain before shrugging and returning turning his head to them. "But that's the thing, isn't it? Simple bravado… well, it can only take you so far." The smirk on his face grew an unsettling amount, his fangs bared and threatened to split his face entirely, and his eyes glowed brighter, the ominous gold ensnaring a tinge of crimson that seemed to dance like the flame of a torch, shimmering like the starry night. The red on his head started dripping onto the floor like water pouring, smearing the basalt before stretching outwards, seemingly coming to life. Like a web being spun, it spread, capturing him in a world of red.
Quite the vivid description!

As Perry emerged in the new world of crimson and familiarity, a voice cried out to him, screaming at him for his past transgressions.

And he turned, standing face-to-face with the one he had abandoned.

“Liar!” she screeched.
Prance. :eyes:

Not another time travel again!! Stop screwing with my reading experience, CRUDE!:screm:

Her eyes lingered on the torches lining the walls, the familiar grey and white giving her a strange sense of foreboding. The torches were still lit, which was strange. No mon should've been out this late, not even the usually nocturnal mons. The Tyrant had made it clear that using the darkness was more of a liability than a benefit.
Who is this now? Someone working for the Tyrant?

Evie narrowed her eyes, brows furrowing as she scanned the area, taking note of the droplets of blood and torn feathers on the ground. There was no doubt in her mind now, Perry definitely had something to do with this.
Oh are we back to what I am considering to be the present with June again now?

She turned her head slightly, catching the Charmander in her peripheral vision.
Alright so we get to see things from Evie's perspective now. Cool!

I feel all angsty about Prance now though! UGH! :sadwott:

June, the apparent 'human', was glancing at their surroundings, his brown eyes wide and curious (didn't all Charmanders have blue eyes?). After a moment, he noticed her stare and flinched, backing away slightly and looking more interested in his claws than her.

That action made her stomach churn and she looked away, shaking her head in an effort to distract herself from the guilt. She swiveled her ears in his general direction, and his strange Aura was brought to her attention once more. Again, it was still the same disgusting mix of lukewarm and half-full, a horrid unnatural viscous and slimy mixture that shouldn't be possible, and yet, there was something about it, something that she couldn't quite put a claw on. It felt kinda familiar? Similar? Like it was something she'd felt before?... No, no that wasn't it.

Ugh, nothing about this made sense.
Interesting to see an outside perspective on June's aura thing.

A Fire-type claiming to be a human with an Aura that could simply be described as abnormal... None of this made any sense.

How she wished he was a simple deranged, insane Pokémon, that would've been so much easier to handle. However, life, it seemed, was still unpredictable even in these peaceful times.
Well, he's not insane and he IS a human who needs help. GG Evie. :mewlulz:

"She must be really… important to you, huh? Um, like… well, I guess it makes sense since I almost–err… well…" He made an exaggerated coughing sound, “What am I saying, of course she's important…” he murmured before turning his head back and continuing, “Anyways, I–"

She didn't know what it was, but something told her he wouldn't stop trying to make short talk until she had answered and that was… totally fine, it wasn't like she'd told him to pipe down mere minutes ago! Why wouldn't he just fucking listen to her and shut up?

She turned around with a snarl, putting a paw forward and crushing the pebble beneath her into dust. "You want me to talk? Fine! My sister, Zeal. She's a cute little Zorua that I would give my life for! I'd raised her since she was hatched twelve years ago! She is my only reason for living, my one true support in life. Without her, I wouldn't be where I am. Without her, my life would have no meaning. Without her, I–" She shook her head, biting her tongue. "I have no reason to live. I'd never forgive myself if I let anything happen to her."

The last part she'd muttered to herself, uncaring of whether he'd heard her or not.
June gets under her skin but she is too much of a softy to kill him. Its kind of cute, actually.

Then she glanced at the Charmander, his arms were held up in front of him in a pitiful attempt to defend himself. She could see the subtle shaking in his legs, his tail flame glowing a little brighter, and the hesitant fear in his eyes. Taking in a breath to calm herself, she gave him a dull stare. "Well? Did that satisfy you?" When she got no verbal response in turn, she sighed and shook her head. "Whatever. Let's just get going, I got a certain bird I have to interrogate."
At least June understands she theoretically COULD kill him.

No longer caring for an answer, she turned around, her ears subconsciously swivelling in his direction as she trotted away.
Spelling: swiveling

That's another cute detail. She decided that she doesn't care for an answer, but her ears say otherwise. :mewlulz:

"D-do you really mean that?" The fear in his stutter froze her for a moment, the question registering in her a second later.

Without missing a beat, she turned her head and answered, "Yes and nothing will stop me from keeping her safe and happy."

"I… wow um, I don't really know how to put this to words but… erm, I–uh… that's… that's really… admirable. I-I mean devoting yourself to making someone else happy? That's just… and I'm sorry if this sounds a little personal," he said, fiddling with his claws and taking quick and short glances at her. "But um, ar-are you sure you're fine? Li-like this, I mean. Disregarding your own worth, basing yourself on someone else's happiness. That just… that just doesn't sound healthy… I mean, don't you want to find your own happiness? Have fun with your life, live it, make friends, explore, and learn things to your heart's content–"
June, I'm not sure when the time to have this conversation is, but it most likely is not right now... :copyka:

"Stop." The sudden sharpness in her voice quickly shut him up. She glared at him, daring him to defy her. With a growl in her voice, she spoke, having tried her hardest to not jump straight to shouting. "Stop trying to sound like you know what I've been through. You have NO idea what my or anyone else's life is like. So please… shut your mouth before I change my mind about your 'help'.”

"I-I–" He flinched, stepping back and relenting with a stutter. "O-okay."
June. You mean well, but yikes.

The two traversed through the caverns in silence.

Evie didn't bother giving him a second glance as she guided him through the tunnels, her eyes meeting the ground, knowing that she'd given more than what she'd like to that boy.
I think this is saying she thinks she went overboard with her reaction to June, but it could also be referring to the amount of details she gave regarding her sister. I suppose it could also be both. Its been a while since I thought I could contribute something useful; I would recommend a little clarification here if its something you intend the readers to understand.

NOT AGAIN! AAAAHH!!! :letsgorb:*Gets sucked again into the interdimensional time-space vortex of narration shift*

A Shinx in his bed of straw stirred in his sleep, shivering, his paws stretched and moved in search of any nearby warmth. Whimpering as the cold assaulted the cub, he curled into a ball, ears lowered. "Mama…"
I don't know where Crude is right now, but I blame him for this. BLAME! :screm:

Shez, in his sleep, moved his paws, swinging at the air as he searched in vain for his mother. He awoke moments later, eyes opening slowly, glancing around as confusion set upon him.

"Mama?" He rubbed his eyes, getting to his feet. "Where are you?" Where was his mama? Did she leave for the harvest already? He thought he'd told her he wanted to join her this time. Did she think he couldn't handle it?

Pouting, he made his way outdoors, and just as he looked around the strangely quiet village, he felt a chill running down his spine. Something wasn't right. Things felt cold and his stomach churned, his fur sparking with electricity as he trotted around the village, around a nearby corner, and made his way towards the central roundabout.

To him, the village had always felt scary at night. It was too quiet, with nothing but the sounds of snoring accompanying the dark, it was creepy as it always felt like the moon was peering down at him, taunting him for his lack of night vision as it painted the village in a chilly pale glow. But tonight, it had felt extraordinarily eerie like something was looking at him, stalking him in the dark.

Every step he took, every house he glanced at, there was nothing and yet, he could feel as if there was something, always just out of his sight but always staring.

Left. Right.
Hmm... unsettling and quiet. :eyes:

He looked at his surroundings, the outer torches were unlit, the wooden houses playing a hollow roar as the night breeze brushed by. The pale moon above shone down on him, tainting the empty village in its eerie color.

Empty.

Empty.

Empty.

Everywhere he looked, there was nothing but empty, abandoned houses, almost like the Pokémon around had been snatched in their sleep. He couldn't hear them. He couldn't smell them. He couldn't see them.
I get the feeling his anxiety is mounting. Cool effect using the same one-word line multiple times.

Where was everyone? Did something come up? Shez moved around quietly, peeking his head into a house every now and then, his stomach sinking lower and lower as he gazed upon another empty building.

"Mama? Aunty Carly? Guardian Sil?" His voice trembled as he ran off and away towards the center of the small village, his voice echoed. "Wh-where are you?"

No one was around.

No one was around.

He was alone. Alone.

Alone.

Shez finally made it. He found that the fountain in the centre was still working, with water spewing out the statue's beak. Yet, the sight of the statue did little to comfort him.
Whats going on? Did crude select another random Pokemon to terrorize by throwing them into another dimension again?

No one was around, he was alone. All alone and with–

Rustle.

Something moved. He jumped, head turning side-to-side, eyes scanning every little nook and cranny around him.

Something was in the dark with him and whatever it was, it was fast. Every time he even caught a glimpse of his stalker, it vanished into a blur.

He could hear his heart pumping in his ears, his eyes struggling to keep his speedy stalker in sight as he subconsciously took a few steps behind.

His hindquarters touched something, something warm and fluffy. Yelping, he jumped, legs spread as he fell onto his belly. Scrambling to his feet, he squeaked out. "Ah! Who's there? I-I-I know how to use Spark! So do-don't mess with me–"
Yeah I think just about anyone would be on edge here... :copyka:

"Hmph, you really gonna do that to me, Shez?" a familiar voice said. Blinking, he turned, the frightened look on his face fading as a smile dawned on him.

"Gild?"

The Purrloin grinned, arms stretched out as Shez tackled her to the ground, forelegs wrapping around her waist and nuzzling into her chest. "Gild! You–I thought… I… my mama… I… alone… no one–there was no one around and I-I was… I was so scared and… and…"
Well at least Shez is ok.

He let loose all the stress onto his long-time friend and in return, she began stroking his back in an attempt to soothe his shivering, chuckling as she said, "You big baby." She shook her head, her warmth doing wonders to his nerves. "Thank Arceus, you're okay…" She sounded so relieved as she tightened the hold around him.
Its nice seeing characters be nice. Ok Gild, on to the list-of-characters-I-like you go! :quag:

The embrace lasted a couple moments before she pushed him away slightly and gripped his shoulders, her eyes staring straight into his eyes with a serious look. "Shez, we need to find Perry."

"Hu-huh?"

"I–I don't have time to explain this, Shez but the village… isn't safe. There's a human out here." She glanced around, eyes narrowing and taking in their surroundings.
Well, that seems pretty bad for them.

"A-a human?" He paled. There had been stories of humans, the ones his mama always told especially freaked him and his friends out. They told of their technologies, able to take control of any Pokémon, regardless of their strength or experience. They told of their determination, always facing danger despite the risk of death. They told of their nature, cruel and viewing Pokémon as nothing but tools. It was the type of story that scared him and his friends no matter how many times they'd heard it.

And if Gild was correct…

He glanced back, noting the look in her eyes, and gulped.

The empty village… a human had taken them.

A human had taken his mama.
It seems that conflic between humans and Pokemon is a thing this fic is doing. Should be interesting to see where this goes.

Summary:

Ok so we got a backstory for Perry(whom I have dubbed Stuffy, the feather-dirt slayer.). Stuffy had one job (well, two I guess, but they were one at a time) and failed. Now the (technically presumed) love of his life, Prance, has been brain-wiped by the human who caught her, presumably via the Pokeball that caught her. What happened to Prance? Will Stuffy ever see her again? He did! Or at least I think he did... it really wasn't too clear on that... The point is: Stuffy has accomplished many things in life and evolved into a Pidgeot, but unless him and Prance can become the couple they were meant to be, his life will forever remain empty! So here I stand on the precipace of what could be. What will happen to Stuffy now? :wowzard:

Oh yeah and the chapter had some stuff in it about June, Evie and Shez. Evie continues to be the tsundere beast that she is and June continues to be awkward and saying all the right things at the worst times imaginable. :unquag:

This chapter had some seriously impressive writing in it. It was crazy how much I didn't mind going down the rabbit hole of Stuffy's backstory! :veelove:

Looking forward to the next chapter! :quag:
 

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Hiya! Thanks for the review!

A professor of some kind it seems. I wonder what the object is? Seems to be a professor of a standard region. Sounds like they are talking about starter Pokemon.
The object's a tablet actually. I should probably clarify that a bit more. And the guy is actually talking about Perry here, rather than a starter mon.
The human vanished or the Pokemon? It sounds like it was the human! Teleportation?
Yup, both vanished. The Pokémon's an Alakazam and the human just used it to teleport.
Either this Pidgey has some amazing IV's or maybe its a shiny?
He's got perfect maxed out IVs
So... I don't know if you like using italics to emphasize words, but if you were to do it as "You're from that section." I think it might give you more of what you are trying to do here. No idea if that is something you might do though. If so, just let me know and I can have a separate section to point out opportunities for that if you want. Mostly, I just wanted to communicate here that I am willing to do that if it's something you find value in.

Female Pidgey is so sassy! :mewlulz:
Prance isn't necessarily emphasizing that sector actually. She says it because to her, it's just another thing that happens.
Ah, so you do use at least some italics! I hadn't noticed if you had before because I haven't been looking for it.
Yeah I have. I use them to show someone's thoughts and sometimes emphasizing certain words.
Wow I caught a spelling error! In this fic, its almost like catching a shiny Pokemon in the wild!
Breeding center.
Well, actually that's the British spelling of the word. I actually have a bad habit of writing both American and British spelling in my writing so if you don't mind, you could help me point out whether I've accidentally let a couple Americans slip past my border.
Ok I was NOT expecting to almost cry. What the CRAP Shini! :copyka:
Damn, you don't know how glad I am to hear that. I was worried that nobody would care too much about Prance and Perry so seeing this just makes me feel happy.

On another note, if this is enough to make you almost cry... you are so not ready for when I dive into the main cast's backstories.
Ok so what was all that crap about how Pokeball's aren't a form of mind control? It BLOODY-WELL looks that way to me here!! :screm:
Haha! You caught me, pokeballs do mind control their captures... or well in this universe they do. There is an in-universe reason for that and I plan to tackle it in a future arc one day.
I'm wondering why Crude even bothers to get others to do things for him. It seems it would be easier for him to just do it all himself. Perhaps his powers are limited in some way that have yet to be displayed?
Perhaps or maybe there is something else playing in the background...
Ok so we got a backstory for Perry(whom I have dubbed Stuffy, the feather-dirt slayer.). Stuffy had one job (well, two I guess, but they were one at a time) and failed. Now the (technically presumed) love of his life, Prance, has been brain-wiped by the human who caught her, presumably via the Pokeball that caught her. What happened to Prance? Will Stuffy ever see her again? He did! Or at least I think he did... it really wasn't too clear on that... The point is: Stuffy has accomplished many things in life and evolved into a Pidgeot, but unless him and Prance can become the couple they were meant to be, his life will forever remain empty! So here I stand on the precipace of what could be. What will happen to Stuffy now? :wowzard:
After Arc 1 gets completed, I do intend to write some extra content tackling more of Perry's backstory and the history of Troublewood so you can look forward to that.
 

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The object's a tablet actually. I should probably clarify that a bit more. And the guy is actually talking about Perry here, rather than a starter mon.

Yup, both vanished. The Pokémon's an Alakazam and the human just used it to teleport.
Ah, these misunderstandings are easy to happen when its a Pokemon pov. Thankfully these things are not essential to enjoy the remainder of this flashback.

He's got perfect maxed out IVs
Ooo a confirmation of it! :eyes:

Nice detail! :quag:

Prance isn't necessarily emphasizing that sector actually. She says it because to her, it's just another thing that happens.
That's a solid reason!

Yeah I have. I use them to show someone's thoughts and sometimes emphasizing certain words.
Ok well I find all kinds of places to add italics in my fic even when I have read it several times. If looking out for those opportunities sounds useful to you, just let me know and I'll treat it like hunting for spelling errors.

Well, actually that's the British spelling of the word. I actually have a bad habit of writing both American and British spelling in my writing so if you don't mind, you could help me point out whether I've accidentally let a couple Americans slip past my border.
Since British spelling looks objectively wrong to me(even though its standard overseas), those should be pretty easy for me to spot. They will probably just look like normal spelling errors to me though, so I probably won't be specifying its the British spelling.

Damn, you don't know how glad I am to hear that. I was worried that nobody would care too much about Prance and Perry so seeing this just makes me feel happy.
If the fic were to suddenly spiral into a tale about Perry going on a quest for Prance to get her back, I wouldn't say no, and that is WITH the rest of the fic already being a solid read!

How could I not care about those birds after that? Seriously. HOW? :screm:

On another note, if this is enough to make you almost cry... you are so not ready for when I dive into the main cast's backstories.
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Haha! You caught me, pokeballs do mind control their captures... or well in this universe they do. There is an in-universe reason for that and I plan to tackle it in a future arc one day.
I understand why you had to do it though. If I knew ahead of time it would have taken away the pivotal moment when the trainer used Prance against Stuffy.

Perhaps or maybe there is something else playing in the background...
But what does that even mean??? :wowzard:

After Arc 1 gets completed, I do intend to write some extra content tackling more of Perry's backstory and the history of Troublewood so you can look forward to that.
*Fingers crossed for some kind of happy ending between Stuffy and Prance even if its way later*
 

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Chapter 5 : Wrathful Betrayal

Hey Shini!

I'm here for the next review in our exchange!

It seems I might be the first to review this far into the fic for you! If so, I am happy to have the honor!

Minor Depictions of Blood and Cuts

His friend was shaken.

It had been a long time since Rower had seen Perry tremble in such fear. The way his pupils had shrunken to mere pinpricks, how his body quivered and curled into itself like a young chick huddling underneath a mother’s plumage, how his talons and muscles were tensed up as if he was debating on whether to run or fight.
Ahh Stuffy... you tried, my bird. Perfect IV's don't let you beat a being with (presumably) hacked stat values unfortunately...

And it was as painful a sight as the few times he'd seen Perry this way.

It only took Rower a few seconds to discern the cause. His friend was one to linger in the past, the pain, the trauma, all of which Rower had long since accepted and moved on from. Therapy wasn't a skill he was proficient in, but even still, he despised how utterly worthless he was when it came to helping others heal from their scars.
Stuffy can't move on. I don't think anyone who experienced what he did with Prance could...

Letting out a sigh, he turned to his friends. The plan brewing in his mind wasn't as thorough as he'd like and frankly, he wasn't even sure if it could carry them through the night but it was all he could come up with in such a short amount of time. Their objective was simple: capture Evie and present her to the human.

And ignoring the way his mind screamed at him for his traitorous ways, he couldn't afford distractions at the moment, not when his citizens and friends were in danger. He grimaced, hoping that Evie would find it in her to forgive them one day.
Rower really doesn't have much choice here. I don't blame him.

He relayed his plan of actions, biting down the urge to flinch at the two’s gazes. Sil was obviously the most reluctant, Evie was practically her role model with how she admired the vixen’s strength. Perry was silent but agreeing.

Rower took much care to not show the concern on his face.

They had to capture her. That was a simple objective.

But beating her was another story and one he wasn't sure they could find the ending to.
Evie does seem pretty capable, certainly.

Lets see where we wind up this time...

Breathe in. Breathe out. Flex your Aura and remove any unnecessary distractions.

She needed to be calm. Calm. Calm. Calm…

The emotions in her convulsed, escaping her feeble attempts at silencing them and striking back with a vicious whip. Evie flinched and let out a quiet groan. Why wasn't it working? Why wouldn't her mind listen to her? She never had any problems reining them in before. Why was it only recently did she have trouble keeping them down?
Back to Evie in the present I assume? Aura huh? I bet June is the problem somehow.

There in her moment of weakness, like the wicked burst of flames, it struck.

… ar-are you sure you're fine? Li-like this, I mean. Disregarding your own worth, basing yourself on someone else's happiness. That just… that just doesn't sound healthy…

She held back a gasp, eyes shut tightly as she shook her head. Those words continued to echo in her mind, fading into a quiet obscurity but never quite leaving her head. The torches nearby mocked her as the unfamiliar familiarity of his distorted Auta trickled into her senses.
"Auta" I'm pretty sure should be "Aura".

He has no right! She growled, tearing herself away from her thoughts. How dare he talk about her as if he knew her… he knew nothing… nothing…

So then, why did her chest feel lighter hearing them?
Aww! Is June getting through to Evie? :veelove:

Let us hope!

Again already? :copyka:

The air grew raspy, a pressure not unlike Evie’s first real confrontation with them bore down on her shoulders. But gone was the weak little girl that could barely stand up to her superiors, Evie glared harder as a loud silence wrapped around them. Everything came to a standstill, a stalemate.
Showdown with the birds?

Drip. Drip. Drip. Her ears twitched. Like a clock ticking down. Water from a stalactite elsewhere dripped down, splashing onto a puddle she couldn't quite see from her position.
Oh I like this description here! I seriously feel like I am standing behind Evie in the cave with her now as she concentrates.

And it continued to…

Drip.

Drip.

Drip…

Winds kicked up. Her senses pinged something long before her body did and her reflexes went to work, leaping over the attack before she even noticed it. The floor where she stood exploded into dust and debris, the force of the attack lodging pebbles into her fur.
Niiice! You are on a roll here so far with the writing!

She blinked furiously, the prickling in her eyes made her fail to notice it before it was too late.

Pain. The burning, searing sensation of a familiar coursed through her body. Blood smeared across her fur and she bit back a cry, eyes trailing the rock that grazed her. Her ears perked up. But her mind was elsewhere.
"The burning, searing sensation of a familiar coursed through her body."

What is going on with this line? 'sensation of a familiar'? I don't think she is talking about the feeling of a small magical wizard's pet from dungeons and dragons shrinking down into the size of a blood cell and coursing through her body, (If that WAS it, you do you I guess...) so I can only assume you meant to word it more like this:

"The burning, searing familiar sensation coursed through her body."
Uh oh, looks like she is distracted in a fight. That is a BAD omen! :copyka:

They were attacking her. Why? Why would they–
Honestly its a fair question considering their otherwise amicable relationship.

Her vision swarmed with blue and agony sent her chest ablaze. With little resistance, her body was flung through the air, the harsh winds accelerating, throwing her even further until she crashed head-first into the rocky walls.
That sounds quite painful... 😬

The rocks broke and fragmented, cutting into her flesh as she fell onto the ground like a lifeless puppet, blood leaking from her ears. She laid there for a second, for two and they did not hold back, firing a series of razor-sharp winds and rocks at her fallen form.

When the dust settled, all she saw was red.
Doesn't sound like Evie is going to be winning this one...

The adrenaline spiked her anger and all signs of pain and exhaustion disappeared in the time it took for her heart to beat. The muscles in her legs tensed and she vanished, reappearing on the other side of the cave in an instant, an imperceptible streak of white trailing behind her. Evie propped herself against a nearby rocky spire and jumped.
Confirmed pokemon have adrenaline. At least for this reality in the fic. I feel like this could have been substituted for a held item that activates at low health or an ability that activates at low health though. Just a thought.

She still has some fight! Lets see how it goes...

The single action allowed her to traverse the sky with ease and Perry let out a startled squawk at her sudden appearance. Her fangs were exposed, violence and anger quivered in her eyes and static danced around her figure. A loud sound akin to metal swords clanging and clashing against each other escaped her mouth as the static all converged into a single location.

Then like a switch being flipped, she gasped and the attack flickered out of existence. What was she doing? That was too much power. She bit her tongue, twisting her body in the air and smacking him with her tail.
Aww... holding back even now. I do like Evie. :eyes:

Unfortunately, Sil flew in between them and was ready to parry the blow away. Perry flew away to safety, the winds starting back up and harsher than ever. Evie clicked her tongue. "Why are you–" She never finished her question as she was forced into blocking the follow-up attack from Rower.

She clicked her tongue in annoyance and with a graceful display of agility, caught herself before she could fall splat onto the ground. Not letting up her offence, a ring of stars surrounded her, moving so fast they looked more like yellow blurs instead. They fired off and honed in on her assailants as she ran, avoiding dozens of attacks by the skin of her teeth.
I like how she is trying to ask them what is happening as they fight.

Also, offense is spelled wrong. You have it as 'offence'.

Dust and stone followed her trail, with each subsequent attack getting closer and closer. Evie took in a breath and exhaled slowly but that did little to quell her slowly growing anger.

Winds kicked up, and Evie's ears twitched, perking up at the sudden change in the atmosphere. She jumped, leaping over a rush of sharpened winds that tore into the ground.

Fragments of rock flew into the air, lodging themselves into her fur as another ping of Aura entered her range. Without blinking, she ducked under a Steel Wing and snarled, clawing at the Swellow who barely dodged the swing.
Looks like you know how to write mon battles! Very nice!

Evie inhaled sharply, her foreleg trembling when she realised what she'd almost done. Pain soon followed that moment of mercy as something tore through her side, splattering blood all over the ground.
should be 'realized'.

I still don't want to see Evie lose this though. Comeon Evie!

She bit back a cry just in time to notice a white streak escaping her sight. Her fluttering mane was making it all the harder to see as dust clouded the rocky field. Panting as blood oozed from the wound in her thigh and the various injuries around her body, her muzzle narrowed into a snarl. Alright. She had enough. She didn't understand why they were attacking her but if they weren't going to listen to her then so be it.

Her ear twitched and once again, a ping of Aura followed and she leapt backward, priming a green ball of energy and firing it off before Sil could react. The attack detonated in mid-air as she was forced to concentrate on another arriving foe, leaping to the side, she dodged a beak aimed at her before twisting on her heel and stomping the ground, dislodging a small ball of mud at the Fearow. That distracted him long enough for her to follow up. Her teeth shone with dark energy and she rushed him, intending to take the bigger threat out first.
Go Evie!
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However, a change in the wind made her abandon her attack. She halted all of her momentum, a sharp stone barely nicking her cheek when she stumbled back.

A growl escaped through gritted teeth as her eyes locked in on the Pidgeot flying far and high above. She ducked beneath a sharp gust of wind and crushed the ground below before retaliating with her hind legs, sending the broken basalt into the sky and covering her escape.

Her wounds were slowing her down but without the moon and with how aggressive they were, she couldn't spare the energy to heal what were ultimately superficial. They had been smart to cage her in here where the limited space made it all the harder to move around. Sure they would theoretically have the same problem as her but flight allowed them to manoeuvre in ways she could never hope to achieve.
should be "maneuver"

For an Eevee, she is pretty super powerful to be dealing with multiple Pokemon including a Fearow and a Pidgeot. And not just any Pidgeot either, this is Stuffy we are talking about!

I like the way you explained how the birds are using this place as a trap to gain an advantage.

A shower of rocks snapped her back to reality and she countered with a heavy sweep of her tail. Unfortunately, it seemed like she miscalculated just how fast they were as her attack left her open to the Drill Peck that tore through her chest. “Fuck!” she cried out but forced herself to fight through the pain as she opened her jaw, dark energy resurfacing to her teeth as she bit down on the Fearow’s wing.
Yikes this is getting bad! (narratively. in terms of writing its a big thumbs up!)
Rower grunted in pain but didn't let up, his attack pushing deeper and deeper into her flesh.

Evie sank her teeth deeper and doubled down, swinging her head back and forth furiously and trying to tear the limb off its socket. A blow from the back knocked her away but not before a satisfying crunch met her ears and she saw the Fearow nearly crash straight onto the ground. Sure, she’d sustained some damage but she dealt a serious blow to their–

Rower’s body became enshrouded in a cloak of feathers and light.
Ah, he must have used roost.

I like how you don't state the attacks and simply describe them. It makes the battles flow smoother.

Fuck! When did he learn that? She leapt into action but was met with an oncoming flaming projectile that delayed her approach. Growling at the distraction, she evaded Sil with a display of agility, only getting her paws nicked as she launched a green ball of energy at Rower, disrupting him from fully healing. But she was too late and Rower took to the air once more, albeit a lot slower than before. This was getting irritat– No! She was infuriated! How dare they attack her! After taki–kidnapping her sister! She glanced back at Sil before flicking a nearby rock into the air with her tail and destroying the approaching stony projectile into a mist of dust, her eyes still locked on the Swellow that now had her beak opened.

Dread crept into her senses as she knew what was to come, Evie had to do something and quick before–

A screech pierced through her thoughts, the sheer force of the booming sound threatening to throw her off her feet. Her ears planted firmly against her skull but that did little to mitigate the agony her head was going through. She struggled to stay tall on her paws but she could bear through it, she had experienced far worse than this.
Evie is incredible to be able to fight against all this! :eyes:

The explosive sound suddenly cut off and Evie leapt out of the three-metre crater that now stood in the middle of the field, her blurry vision catching sight of the Swellow who seemed distracted. She caught Sil saying something but she couldn't quite hear what was said with the ringing in her ears. At the very least, it seemed like they were letting up on their attacks and thus, allowing her to breathe a little before the fight began once more. The tension in the air was still there, though strangely feeling even more oppressive and suffocating than before. She didn't dwell on that any longer, she had to use the time provided to recover and–
Should be "meter" not "metre".

Evie flinched as a raging inferno washed over her senses. The amount of anger and hatred that reached into her uncontested, shook her, merging in with her exhaustion. She let out a hiss, glaring hateful daggers at the Swellow before her. And yet, as sudden as it may be, she knew these emotions didn't fully belong to her.
What is happening here. There is fire but where is it coming from. Emotions that don't belong to her?

No, the vengeful wrath belonged to Sil.
Is Sil using an attack that is going over my head? Is Sil using swagger on Evie or something?

Sil turned and Evie followed suit, just in time to see two feline children running away from a screaming… Charmander.
Ok so June is screaming and chasing two small Pokemon cats.

Time crawled to a stop. Every fibre of her being ached with a fire that she’d always welcome and her mind was elsewhere. A flaming bird-shaped projectile soared through the sky, the blue flames tinted with streaks of white as it barrelled down and straight toward–

Without a second thought, her body moved.

And her world became cloaked with flames that were once an ally.
Should be "fiber" not "fibre"

What is the flaming bird shaped projectile and where did it come from. Is it a fire blast from Charmander? Is it a sky attack from Stuffy?

I have no clue what is currently happening. Its possible it's my fault that I don't know, but I'm not sure!

Maybe things will be explained now? :copyka:

If he had only one word to describe the battle before him, it would be intense. The difference between watching something like this on video or TV was immense.
Ah, this must be June. Shed some light on what's happening would you buddy?

Even this far, he could physically feel the strength and speed behind each attack. The level of savagery as their attacks ravaged the land, cutting large gashes into the field, slicing any obstacles in their way like they were paper mache. It was insane.

And that wasn't mentioning how Evie was capable of handling herself in a one-on-three. The way she moved, untethered by the various wounds on her body, the strength behind her attacks, where the world seemed to shake and cave under their power, and the sheer baffling speed his reptilian eyes couldn't even perceive. It was incredible! God, he wished his brothers were here to see… this…
I enjoy seeing June's perspective on the fight too. Adds more weight to it.

Oh… right…

… he’d done it again…

What was he doing wasting his time around here? Standing around and gushing about someone he'd insulted and hurt? Why wasn't he living up to his word and helping her or looking for his brothers? Was he really that simple-minded that he'd immediately latch onto the closest distraction and ignore everything around him?
Good to see June trying to grow and is taking steps to change that.

Given what is happening right now though... he really doesn't seem to be helping much. I don't fault him though. Trying to intervene in that battle would be pretty terrifying.

His eyes lingered on the battle playing out before he tore them away, gritting his teeth and glaring at his clenched fists. What was the point of being a damn Pokémon if he couldn't do anything and stand around like a worthless chump? Maybe he should just leave and look for his brothers. It wasn't like Evie needed him. He would just be in the way.
An understandable inner struggle.

June sighed. Why was he thinking like this? Was he really thinking of running away instead of keeping his damn promise? Was he that much of a coward? His arms shook as he took a step back, his tail flame flaring and–

His body froze and the last of his breaths faded into a colourless mist. His arms and legs felt stiff, staying locked against his sides and feeling like he was in a wad of putty. White seeped into the corners of his vision, the cavernous walls breaking down as black spots swam in the air.
should be "colorless" not "colourless"

What is going on now?? :eyes:

He shut his eyes, biting down on his lip. He didn't want to be here. Not again. Not again! What did he do wrong? Why was he here again? Why couldn't he leave? Why couldn't he move? He was scared. He didn't want to see that orb again. He didn't want to feel like that again. Never again.

But the void didn't listen as it forcibly opened his eyes, keeping them locked tight on the darkness that surrounded him. There it was. He could see it again.

Its writhing, twisted form of distorted reality, begging, screaming at him to grasp it, to utilise it to its fullest potential. Its soothing, ethereal, calming voice allured his being, his essence, his very soul, tempting him, whispering soft, delectable words into his mind. About how he was specially chosen to fulfil its wishes, about how he was the only one capable of doing this, about what he could do with its power.
Should be "utilize" not "utilise"

Should be "fulfill" not "fulfil"

Weird stuff is happening. :copyka:

Yes, he has to grasp it, grab it in his hands and–

"No!" June screamed, tearing his arm away from the orb and out of the endless realm. "I'm done with this! No one's going to force me into doing anything! Not a magical force, not a magical clone, not anyone! I'll finish what I've started and I'm through with hiding and running! I'm going to–to…"

In his heightened state of determination, he had initially failed to notice two newcomers, two Pokémon who were currently staring at him with wide, terrified eyes.

He stared at them for an awkward second that felt like a millennium and he raised an arm, waving at them with a nervous grin in an attempt to diffuse the situation. "Uh, hi there?"

They, in response to his friendly gesture, cried out bloody murder and ran.
Why are they running? I assume I am about to find out...

And he, without even a second of consideration, made his decision in the form of chasing them down and shouting at them, attempting to dissuade whatever false image they had of his breakthrough.

They did not listen.

And as he made his way onto the battlefield, ignoring the alarms ringing in his head, he missed the raging inferno of vengeance and hatred barreling towards him.

"Fire-type!"

The blood curdling shriek and the whistling in the air were the last thing he heard before the world became dark.
OK so they are afraid because he is a fire type. I assume they have trauma associated with the tyrant that was defeated.

Raging inferno, is he talking about Evie? A bird? I'm so lost...

Summary:
This chapter is mostly about Evie's epic battle with the birds and lots of stuff involving June is confusing.

My line by line went over the parts that were confusing to me.

I loved reading Evie's thoughts on things and reading how the battle was unfolding.

I hope at least some of the confusion gets resolved in the next chapter!
 
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Hi, thanks for the review and glad you enjoyed it.

What is going on with this line? 'sensation of a familiar'? I don't think she is talking about the feeling of a small magical wizard's pet from dungeons and dragons shrinking down into the size of a blood cell and coursing through her body, (If that WAS it, you do you I guess...) so I can only assume you meant to word it more like this:
Yeah I can see how it can be confusing but to clarify, this is talking about pain. It's something that she's been quite literally carrying and feeling for most of her life so pain is a 'familiar' to her. I might add a word or two to clarify this bit a little so thanks for telling me.
Confirmed pokemon have adrenaline. At least for this reality in the fic. I feel like this could have been substituted for a held item that activates at low health or an ability that activates at low health though. Just a thought.
Funny enough, there already is an adrenaline item. It's called an Adrenaline Orb, it gives you a +1 to speed when you get intimidated.
What is happening here. There is fire but where is it coming from. Emotions that don't belong to her?
Aura ain't the only thing Evie can sense and I'm not super sure if I brought it up in earlier chapters or at least made it blatant but Evie can sense emotions, that's what this is supposed to be.
What is the flaming bird shaped projectile and where did it come from. Is it a fire blast from Charmander? Is it a sky attack from Stuffy?
Sil's using Brave Bird here.
OK so they are afraid because he is a fire type. I assume they have trauma associated with the tyrant that was defeated.
Yup, tons of trauma as mentioned when Evie first met June, she said the inhabitants here wouldn't hesitate to kill him or run from him.
Raging inferno, is he talking about Evie? A bird? I'm so lost...
Things are basically running concurrently with Evie's POV so... super speedy super angrily Sil with Brave Bird coming in to paste him into the ground.
Should be "meter" not "metre".
So uh, while I appreciate calling out the British, I'm gonna be using British spelling of things for the rest of the fic. So If you can, you should point out if I accidentally made them American instead
This chapter is mostly about Evie's epic battle with the birds and lots of stuff involving June is confusing.
Yeah, this chapter's a decent bunch shorter than the rest and it's pretty fast paced because of the fight. It was originally supposed to be a lot longer but I kinda split it up and decided that ending on a cliffhanger would be better 'cause I wanna focus on where Ane and Quil are currently at for the next couple chapters.
 

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Hi, thanks for the review and glad you enjoyed it.
Indeed I did!

Yeah I can see how it can be confusing but to clarify, this is talking about pain. It's something that she's been quite literally carrying and feeling for most of her life so pain is a 'familiar' to her. I might add a word or two to clarify this bit a little so thanks for telling me.
Basically the wording is bad here. As in you made a mistake in the way you worded it that makes it make no sense. Its like you forgot a word or ordered the words wrong or something. If you read it slowly and carefully, you should be able to see exactly what I am talking about.

Now regarding what you explained with Evie and pain, that is an interesting tidbit! If you were not already trying to do so, you could explain that in this line so readers can get the first glimpse of that (unless you said it in a previous chapter and I totally forgot. If so, I apologize.)

Funny enough, there already is an adrenaline item. It's called an Adrenaline Orb, it gives you a +1 to speed when you get intimidated.
That IS pretty funny, actually :mewlulz:

Aura ain't the only thing Evie can sense and I'm not super sure if I brought it up in earlier chapters or at least made it blatant but Evie can sense emotions, that's what this is supposed to be.
Outside of the context of a battle, I don't think I would have figured that out.

INSIDE the context of a battle there was NO hope of it!

Seriously, we have June's weird visions, auras, a Pokemon battle involving several combatants, Crude is potentially around somewhere too and can do all kinds of reality-warping acid-trippy things, and Evie is sensing emotions in ways that make me think she is being attacked by a fire attack? :copyka:

If you did bring it up in previous chapters it went straight over my head. I won't pretend I am a master at picking up on what is happening though.

Explanation is certainly appreciated though!

Sil's using Brave Bird here.
This is potentially something that many readers would not need clarification on. Thanks for pointing it out for me.

Yup, tons of trauma as mentioned when Evie first met June, she said the inhabitants here wouldn't hesitate to kill him or run from him.
Ah yes. I do remember her saying something like that now.

Things are basically running concurrently with Evie's POV so... super speedy super angrily Sil with Brave Bird coming in to paste him into the ground.
Sil is attacking June? I thought Sil was attacking Evie. I thought Evie was attacking June to save the cat Pokemon running from him.

No wonder I was confused lol...

So uh, while I appreciate calling out the British, I'm gonna be using British spelling of things for the rest of the fic. So If you can, you should point out if I accidentally made them American instead
So... I WOULD do that for you, but I can't.

British spelling looks wrong to me and American looks correct to me. I realize that each are correct for their respective cultures, but American spelling is WAY too ingrained in my mind.

I'm also not even AWARE of all the differences between American and British spelling!

I also can't tell in MANY cases if a word is spelled wrong or if its spelled correctly in British.

The result is I'm probably going to occasionally point out spelling errors when it is actually just spelled British.

I think I point out more useful spelling errors than not useful ones though for what that is worth though?

Alternatively, I can just ignore all spelling errors if that makes you happier. Up to you.

Yeah, this chapter's a decent bunch shorter than the rest and it's pretty fast paced because of the fight. It was originally supposed to be a lot longer but I kinda split it up and decided that ending on a cliffhanger would be better 'cause I wanna focus on where Ane and Quil are currently at for the next couple chapters.
I think that is a good narrative choice. Ane and Quil have been ignored for a long time now, so it will certainly be good to see what's going on in their neck of the woods.
 

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Hey there! Returning to this story for Catnip, specifically Chapter 2. Thoughts:
  • I think I was a bit confused about the pokefied thing; Oak said something about no people from other worlds having been pokefied, but I think I understood this as "no one has been pokefied", so it took me a while to realize that he meant the former when I kept encountering spots that did suggest there had been pokefied people before. Likely my fault, but also possibly something that could be edited for clarity.
  • That creepy grayscale scene really took me by surprise, lol. It was pleasantly creepy and foreshadowed the change in tone that would come later.
  • I enjoy that Fallers are so common in this world that they now have an entire system to deal with them!
  • I like June's characterization in being this guy that cracks jokes and all but also uses that veneer to hide his anxieties.
  • Then June's doppelgänger shows up and we get more creepy stuff again. It does feel kind of... strangely un-pokemon with its aesthetics, but I'm basically dead last on the list of people who get to point fingers there. I suppose it's just because this is so drenched in Pokémon otherwise that it sticks out. But that can, of course, be the entire point. Corrupting that which is familiar.
  • I love Evie oh my god my baby. Riddled with trauma and guilt and boredom.
  • I think I mistook Evie for a shiny Zorua when her brown coat and little Zorua sister was mentioned, and I briefly thought that she was putting on a disguise with the look that June saw. But I'm thinking she actually is this odd Eevee instead.
I think that's all I have! Sorry that it's kind of unstructured. See you around!
 

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Chapter 6: The Other Siblings

Hey Shini,

Looks like with this review I will be caught up on JaND!? :wowzard:

You know, it's a crying shame that so few people give reviews all the way through a fic. Even people involved in exchanges seem to rarely do so! That said, I'm honored to be the first to tell you about how I read through it all!

I know it takes a while to put out some high quality chapters, but I hope you will be able to deal with small writing breaks followed by more activity! No year-long breaks! :eyes: I need to find out what happens with your characters! In particular, I need to see what happens with June, Evie, Stuffy, the feather-dirt slayer and Prance! Would be interesting to see something be able to put up a real fight against Crude too! (though I don't feel like JaND is anywhere NEAR that happening yet...)

As the evening sun began to set, the sky above became a beautiful mesh of red and orange. Winds blew against the soft grass, the gentle breeze caressing the Pokémon ranger as Neo took in the fresh air. The Minun’s eyes were firm and attentive as he scanned the land below him. A beautiful sea of grass stretched as far as the eye could see. A few Pokémon were still scurrying about the land, likely wishing to use the last few minutes of the sun.
Pokemon ranger huh? Unfortunately I do not have experience with that, so I am hoping it will be written in a way that will not require much outside explanation.

Still, you paint a fine picture of the scenery here.

He took in a breath, closed his eyes, and flexed his ears. Nothing existed but the sounds of nature. He could make out the sounds of battling a couple of ways to the north. To the south, he could hear a Pidgey nesting nearby, sounding exhausted from a day full of hunting. And around him, he could feel the warmth radiating from his Flygon, Peach.

Despite what some Pokéhumans may say, being a Pokémon did have its advantages. Sure, there had been times when he wondered what life would be like if he was still human, but nothing could replace the memories he made along the way. A small smile made its way onto the Minun’s face before it fell slightly as Peach, suddenly flew to a stop, eyes locking onto something he couldn’t quite see.

Odd, now what could be getting her attention? “Peach? What’s wrong?” he asked, ears twitching as he looked around. They were just on their last flight around the route. What was so important for her to stop?

“I think I see someone, Neo,” she said, quirking a curious brow from the ranger.
Ok, so it took me this long to realize what all was happening here. Neo is a Pokefied human who is a Minun. Neo has a female Flygon named Peach. Neo is a Pokemon ranger. For a while, I thought there were three characters in this scene instead of two because I assumed a Pokemon ranger would have to be a human and not a Pokefied human.

Super hearing is a cool skill though.

“Someone? What do you mean?–”

“Hang on tight, Neo! I’m gonna go check it out!”

Neo baulked at what she meant, and was clutching tightly onto the harness in preparation. The world around him blurred as the winds kicked harder and harder, the fur on his body billowed and he shut his eyes. No matter how many times he’d done this, he still couldn’t get over the insane speeds Peach could go. Doubly so when he was on her back. In a matter of seconds, she had traversed over what might be miles before slowing to a halt and landing between a grove of trees.
Nice way of describing the speed Peach goes! I bet you could push it even further though! Peach sounds like she would be like a roller coaster but even FASTER! :wowzard: Roller coasters can be fun once you get used to them though.

I'm surprised Neo doesn't have a pair of goggles for these kinds of situations.

She glanced around, eyes narrowing and scanning the trees as he wondered just what had gotten her attention. “It should be around here…” she muttered and Neo flexed his ears, offering some form of help in whatever had gathered his Flygon’s attention.

They flew around, rounding trees and bushes, until Neo finally spoke up. “Peach? What exactly are we looking for?”

It took a moment for her to respond. “... I don’t know… I just feel like there’s something–” Peach froze, neck rising to its full length as her eyes fluttered. Then, like something flipped inside her, her head jerked to the side and he could see her eyes narrow. “It’s there.”
Those two make quite a team to tracking stuff down!

He turned to the right, glancing in the direction she was flying towards before he spotted it. There was a note on a tree–no wait, it was an Exeggutor! What was an Exeggutor doing here?

He leapt off of Peach’s back, inspecting the unconscious Exeggutor before them. It didn’t look like it was harmed in any way, but its shallow breaths were concerning.

“Neo. Here, look at this.” Peach took the note taped on the Exeggutor’s body and handed it to him.

Warily, he grabbed it and as he read the piece of paper, his face turned paler and paler. “Peach… do you think you can carry this Exeggutor?” He gulped, looking at the note like it was gonna jump him.

Peach gave an affirmative nod. “Of course I can!”
Peach is a powerhouse. :mewlulz:

I must admit I have no clue what is going on with the Exeggutor. Curious to see where this leads!

“Good… let’s send this to the guys at the outpost. I think a certain professor in the local town will want to know what happened to their Pokémon.”


Hmm! So, it's interesting that we get to see Neo, who is another Pokefied human apart from the three brothers. Makes me wonder what Neo's backstory is.

The Pikachu got onto his feet, eyes firmly shut as he groaned, paws clutching his head, trying to soothe the raging pain. “Argh, my head hurts,” he hissed and took in a few breaths until eventually, the pain lessened and Ane could finally open his eyes, seeing…

Nothing but darkness.

Okay, he closed his eyes again and reopened them. “Why is everything so dark?” he muttered, brows furrowed.
Ane... its been ages! Is this where you went directly after Crude dimension warped you way back the last time we saw you? :eyes:

His surroundings were dark, darker than the blackest night, and he could barely make out his own hand–paws (he had to remember that he wasn’t human anymore) in front of him. Memories of the last hour burrowed into his mind, clouding his head with images of a certain annoying redhead.
Use a thundershock attack to light up your surroundings! Or maybe just a small spark! uh... assuming you know HOW. (I don't remember how proficient Ane is or is not with using attacks as a Pikachu.)

Right... That Crude guy did this.
Good. Thank you for clearing that up Ane. I had no idea how much time actually elapsed for you or what's been happening since the last time I saw you.

When I get my hands on you… He growled, promising to punch the guy when he saw him again. With the resolve set in his mind, he looked around, trying to find something in the unnatural darkness. If his brother was here, he could… no. Ane shook his head. June was an idiot. He wouldn’t be able to find his own two feet here, even if he tried. Though that was if Ane could get him to stop messing around and treat things seriously.

He walked around, stumbling around aimlessly, when the feeling of something soft and fluffy beneath snapped him back to reality, a feminine moan of pain coming from below. Startled, Ane jumped back and raised his arms in front of him, fists clenched.
Still no using electricity to light things up, Ane? (I guess he must not know how.)

“Ow, five more minutes, Evie. I don’t think that pecha berry sat right with me,” a voice said, letting out a pitiful whine.
Oh SNAP! This must be Evie's sister!! :wowzard:

Evie? Ane raised a brow, lowering his arms. Who the hell is Evie?
Only the coolest, most caring, magazine-cover Eevee you would ever see.

He squinted his eyes in an attempt to see whoever the speaker was, but no dice. He leaned down and poked whatever just spoke, stirring the creature up.

“Okay, okay. I’m-ow up,” she said, batting his arm away with a wince. He backed up, feeling a very distinct wind around them.

The awkward silence broke when the little girl spoke in a confused tone. “Who are you? You’re not Evie… and… and where am I?” He could practically feel the eyes scrutinising him when she asked that.
scrutinizing*

feel "the" eyes? I think maybe you meant "her" eyes.

Well, at least Ane isn't getting immediately slapped unconcious by her...

“Course I’m not ‘Evie’. Do I look like a girl to you?” He scoffed.

“Maybe?” the girl said with a wince.
Hate to say it, but Pikachu doesn't exactly look like the most masculine of mon... :mewlulz:

Ane sighed, shaking his head and pointing in front of him. “Look, kid. I don’t know where we are or what you are, but my brothers got separated from me by some weird man that looks like my brother and I need to go find them.”

“Oh, I can help you! Zeal is a great hide-and-seeker!” Zeal, he was gonna assume that was her name, exclaimed with a burst of enthusiasm that was quickly deflated by the subsequent winces and ‘Ows.’ “... Wait, man? What do you mean by man? Are you talking about humans? But there shouldn’t be any humans in Troublewood. Evie said so!”

“Troublewood? The hell is that?” Ane quirked a brow.

“Rower said that’s what our home is called! Oh oh, but I remember that Carly said it used to be called Distorted Woods!” She suddenly gasped. “Are you from the past or something? Is that why you don’t know what Troublewood is?”
She just casually drops a line involving the past like it's a common occurence!

Huh. I guess that means maybe it is? :eyes:

Ane grew annoyed at the energetic girl. She was reminding him too much of his brother. Resisting the urge to roll his eyes, he answered, “No, I’m from a different world. You can’t possibly expect me to know the names of everything.” He already had trouble keeping track of the names she just said.

“A different world? You’re from another world?” If their surroundings weren’t so bloody dark, he was sure he could see stars twinkling in her eyes. “That must mean you’re an alien! That’s so cool!”
Yeah, I guess she does sound a little like June. :mewlulz:

I bet it would be fun to see those two interact.

Ane grunted. “It’s only cool if you’re not the one that got sent against your will. This stupid body can’t even grip stuff properly.” Stupid June and his stupid luck at retaining actual fingers.
I don't know Ane, it sounds like she might have been brought here against her will too unless they actually are both in Troublewood. I guess they probably are, since Ane was presumably the only one of the two who got dimension-shifted.

Yeah, lack of fingers would be frustraiting lol.

Zeal let out a confused noise. “Your body? What’s wrong with it? You look like a normal Pikachu to me.”

“And that’s the problem.” He scowled. “I’m supposed to be a person, not some magical animal from a kid’s game.”

“Oh.” She paused. “Wait, if you’re not a Pikachu, then what are you?”

“A human,” he said simply, not seeing any reason to withhold that information.

“A-a human?” she exclaimed, and he heard her fall back in shock. But it didn’t take long for her to recover as Ane jumped back when he felt the little girl poking him. “You don’t look like a human… and you’re not as mean or as evil as how Perry said you’d be…”
Perry Stuffy, the feather-dirt slayer may have had perfect IVs, but if he was REALLY perfect he would still be with Prance. :sadwott:

“Hey, hey, hands off the merchandise, kid.” Ane pushed away the curious paws, touching him. “I already said that some weird doppelgänger kidnapped my brothers and me. If that Crude guy was anything like my brother, he’s probably the reason we got turned,” he murmured the last part to himself before turning to face where he thought Zeal was. “So how about you, kid? How did you get here?”

“Oh, I, uh… I don’t remember…” she said after a moment of hesitation. “Anyway, my name’s Zeal! Evie says introducing yourself is the first step to making friends!”

“I’m Ane–”

“Ane? Wait, I thought you were a boy?”
This is GREAT! :mewlulz:

“What are you talking about? Of course, I’m a guy.”
Not according to most people I know...

“But Ane is a girl’s name!”
Yep.

“No, it isn’t.”

“Yes, it–”

“Shut up!” Ane shouted, glaring at the direction of the voice. “I don’t know what this world’s deal is, but Ane is not a fucking girl’s name! It’s Chinese, okay? So, it’s not a fucking girl’s name!”
Touchy touchy...

Also a tad harsh. Not only is Zeal cute, but she is currently your only source of information in this unfamiliar world, Ane!

An awkward silence took over them after his outburst. Ane sighed. “Look, I’m sorry about that, Zeal. I didn’t mean to scream at you. I just… I just have a lot of shit on my plate right now and my fucking brother’s treating everything like it’s a game and I just–Grah! I hate this so much! I hate how my brother’s such an idiot! I hate how Quil is just playing along with him! And I fucking hate how that Crude guy is just playing with us like we’re nothing but toys–”

He felt small, fluffy arms wrapping around him. The sudden soft sensation cut his rant short, leaving him catching his breath in the tiny girl’s embrace. He didn’t have the strength in him to push her away.
Oh my goodness! Zeal is even cuter than I expected! :wowzard:

Once he felt a little better, Zeal squirmed a bit before letting go. “... sorry about making fun of your name. I didn’t think you’d get mad at me.”

“It’s… fine… I guess I just hated being ignored for so long. God, I just want to go home.” Ane groaned. “I hate this stupid dark void that Crude guy put us in and–” He felt the fluffy arms wrap around him again.
Just shut up, and enjoy Zeal's company Ane. :mewlulz:

But this time, the embrace didn’t feel as warm, no it was the opposite. Zeal was quivering violently, the grip around him was so tight he had problems believing it came from a small Pokémon. His mind then went on high alert when he heard sniffling and felt wetness on his fur.

Resisting the urge to shiver at the weird sensation, he asked, “Zeal? What’s wrong?”

“We-we’re in a… a d-dark void?” she stammered, a pitiful whine coming from her. “I-I can’t… I… don’t leave me alone, please. Ane, I-I don’t want to be alone…”
Ane.

You need to hug her back and comfort her RIGHT NOW!

Unsure of what to do, he patted her head and scratched her mane like how he did so to his dogs, feeling the soft fur under his paws. “... there there…” he muttered. He had absolutely no idea what he was doing, but he wasn’t going to just ignore a crying kid. “I… uh, I won’t leave you, Zeal. You’re… you’re too cute for me to wanna leave you.”

What was he saying? Too cute? He didn’t even know what she looked like. It didn’t seem like his words were doing anything… It was probably best if he stayed quiet and let her calm down. Even if he did feel bad for not trying his best.
You might not know what she looks like, but you know that she is small and soft. What more do you need?

I have to say, Zeal is pushing all the right buttons. I like her already.

How do you DO that so frequently with your characters, Shini?

Ane adjusted his position, wrapping his arms around her and staying silent, providing what little comfort he could. She’d be fine, right? Pokémon were powerful critters from what he remembered. She’d get over whatever this was.

Her sniffles lessened and slowed as she gathered her bearings. “I’m… I’m sorry for being such a crybaby, Ane,” she said, voice a little muffled under his fur. “I… I just…”

“Hey, it’s okay…” He paused to figure out what to say. “It’s okay if you don’t wanna talk about it.”

“I… Thanks, Ane,” she murmured. “You really are different from the stories.”
Something to be said for meeting someone for the first time in complete darkness. What a nifty concept! I love how it cuts through the fluff and gets right to some substantial bonding so quickly. Totally doesn't seem like it should work, but it does!

She said no more on that subject, so Ane took that as a cue to stay silent, allowing themselves a moment to relax in each other’s embrace.

Then, a powerful gust of wind blew through the void, pushing against them as a bright flash of light appeared, illuminating the void.
Oh, they really ARE in a void! I thought they were just in a house, hut, cave, or whatever dwelling Zeal had. (I forget what she lives in presumably with Evie)

He could feel the girl in his embrace loosen up, but he chose to ignore it when he spotted a familiar red-haired menace coming into view.

Crude phased into existence and faced them with a sharp grin on his face, which quickly faltered when he noticed the two. “Er, am I interrupting something?”
Always the character, Crude is.

“You!” Ane shouted, stepping in front of Zeal with a paw pointed at his brother’s fake.

“Me,” Crude said, nonchalantly pointing at himself as he dodged a fist aimed at him. Snickering, he halted in the air and waited until the last second before going through the Pikachu.
"Going through the Pikachu" is a little vague. It took Zeal's comment below about Ghost-types for me to be sure what happened here. Basically, Crude phased through the Pikachu as if either Crude, Pikachu, or both were holograms.

Ane shivered at the chilling sensation before stumbling forward and falling onto his face, his ire spiking at Crude chuckling at his failure. Getting up, he pointed a paw at the man, who was now hovering mere inches from Zeal. “Get away from her!”
Ane, I don't think you want to give Crude any more ideas than he already has. Messing with Zeal might NOW be the most fun thing he can possibly do...

The little fox gave the man a bewildered and frightened gaze. “H-how did you… but you’re a human… only Ghost-types could… how…”

Stopping in front of her, Crude poked her in the nose and laughed at the reaction on her little vixen face. “Now, aren’t you just the most adorable little Zorua I’ve ever met,” he said, snapping his fingers and locking the approaching Ane in place. “The name’s Crude, little lady. Don’t wear out the name.”

“Huh?” was the only response he got from the confused fox.
Poor Zeal! Ugh... this is probably not going to go well now that she has Crude's attention...

“Let go of me!” Ane shouted, mustering all of his hatred into a single glare, which only caused the fake to wag a finger at him.

“Not until you stop trying to attack me~” Crude snickered in his hand. “Oh, I kid. You can’t hurt me even if you tried–” An explosion racked his back, and he turned with a raised brow.

“Le-let him go!” Zeal raised her voice in an act of defiance and bravery. However, that display didn’t have quite the effect she wanted, as she couldn’t quite keep her body from trembling in fear.

“I was just about to get to that, sweetie,” the fake said in a disgustingly sweet tone, looking completely unaffected by whatever caused the explosion.
Yeah... if even Stuffy couldn't take him, poor Zeal likely has no chance...

Feeling returned to Ane’s body, and he flopped onto the ground with a painful ‘thud’. Growling, he got up and attempted to attack the false June.

Crude held up a finger, teleporting away just before Ane could hit him. He then reappeared several metres above them and waited for Ane to settle down before saying, “Anyway, welcome to Zgwipivxd! Or, in translatable terms, the gaps between multiverses!
Wow, huge piece of lore just dropped! Such a unique concept for a name for it too!

Maybe ShiniGojira will come to the rescue and vanquish Crude? That IS where Shini is currently stranded after all...

Well, technically you’re in my barrier inside the gaps so you’re not actually in the gaps between multiverses but…” he trailed off, chuckling nervously, “let’s just say it’s better you’re not exposed to the full breadth of the gaps. It’s kinda like beyond the concept of dimensions and infinity, and it is not a fun experience to be in, I can tell you that.”
Crude can withstand something beyond the CONCEPT of dimensions and infinity?!?! :wowzard:

I think we are going to need Gurren Lagann to take him down at this point! :wowzard:

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Q would probably also work.

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Ane growled. This was definitely June’s creation. Only he could rambled about everything and nothing at the same time all the while keeping that stupid grin.
Should be "Only he could have rambled"

“Hey, I resent that thought!” Crude shouted, lowering himself down to the ground and pulling out a sheet of paper. “Unlike him, I’d already gotten my degree in multiversal travelling – which, by the way, is completely different from universal travelling, so don’t you dare get them messed up – several centuries ago!” His eyes glowed brighter, a tint of purple now creeping into his pupils, mixing in with the golden shine and making them look even more extravagant.
Should be "traveling"? 2 l's being used both times.

I think you're lying Crude. You don't have a degree in that. There isn't a college that teaches it! If you REALLY do, then break the forth wall in Shini's reply to this review and correct me. I dare you.

He blinked, burning away the purple tint that was creeping into his pupils before shaking his head. “Oops, got a bit carried away there. Now, where was I? Oh right.” He snapped his fingers before a flash of white enveloped them.

Hissing in pain at the sudden assault of light, Ane covered his eyes with an arm, bracing for what was to come. When his eyes adjusted to the sudden glare, he lowered his arms and looked around in surprise.

Surrounding them were buildings tall enough to pierce the heavens,
Did you say... pierce the heavens? Right AFTER I made a Gurren reference?! :wowzard:

their cubical shape reminding him of the time he’d travelled across the country to see his aunt in one of those big cities. He never could quite get rid of the awe that came when seeing such wonderful displays of human ingenuity.
another double L traveled. Dang British spelling! :unquag: (now that I know, I'll stop bringing it up for that)

Tall enough to pierce the heavens makes me think they are SPACE ELEVATORS or something!

His feet were on something that felt like concrete and smoothened rocks as opposed to the oddly smooth and soft surface earlier, and he could see lamp posts and traffic lights further down the road. He looked to his side, catching Zeal in a similar state of awe.
smoothened? I think you meant smoothed... unless this is yet another British inquisition. :copyka:

But how does he know what Zeal LOOKS like?! :unquag: Maybe he should assume it is Zeal since he sees no one else around or something and she looks to be roughly the same size as the one he was hugging.

“Welcome to my pocket universe!” Crude exclaimed, snapping Ane out of his trance as he snarled and glared at the man. “As you can see, this place is a one-to-one scale of one of your” – He pointed at Zeal – “human cities. Now hidden around the city are three keys, and each of them will require you to complete an objective before you can safely secure them. Once you’ve gathered all three of them, bring them to the centre of the city and I’ll let you kids go home to your brothers and sister. Does that sound good to you?”

What’d sound good would be his fist breaking that arrogant jerk’s face! Ane scowled.

“Wh-why are you doing this to us?” Zeal stuttered, her bushy tail low and her ears drooping.
Awww I like the way you described Zeal here.

Good question, Zeal. That's what I want to know too.

“Because it’s fun, duh!” His golden eyes glowed brighter as he spread his arms. “Being someone as old and powerful as I am can get pretty boring, so I–excuse me, what?” He stopped short as reality around them shook and distorted. Crude blinked and glared at seemingly nothing. “What do you mean I have to tell them why?”
What is THIS?! Crude has someone he has to answer to?! :wowzard:

The air around him shook harder and Crude looked affronted. “Hell no! I’m not gonna change the test to add more ‘drama’! I’ve spent decades planning this out and I’m not about to ruin it just because you think it’s boring!”

After a moment of silence, Crude let out a long, drawn-out sigh, his golden eyes losing their shine. “Fine… but you better keep me out of your inane ‘experiments’ or so help me. I will scream.”
Hmm, maybe not a superior but an associate or sorts?

Muttering curses under his breath, he descended from the sky and snapped his fingers, a puff of smoke appearing in his hands. When the smoke cleared, he carried a machine that barely fit in his hands. It held many similarities to the drones from Ane’s world, but it was sleeker, smoother, and as shiny as marble. A soft blue glow hummed from where its propellers would be.

Crude cleared his throat. “Alright, you little crapheads. As I was saying before, I got so rudely interrupted.” He glared at the sky. “This is one of Briggs’ oldest models. It’ll help you locate the keys and direct you towards where you’ll find them and once you do that… well, I was going to make this a surprise, but–” He cut himself off with a grumble and snapped his fingers.

A warped ball of reality burst into existence, its form disfigured and twisted as it expanded and swelled, bigger and bigger it grew before tearing a fissure in reality, revealing a dark void filled with various Pokémon, all of them looking at each other in unease before noticing their onlookers.

“Tada…” Crude raised his hands and shook them unenthusiastically, dropping the drone in the process. “Now take a good and loooong look because those are the ones who are on the line. See that puppy over there? Lost her parents against whom they call The Tyrant, was nursed and taken care of by their local nurse AKA the Chansey, who’s trying their hardest to calm everyone. See their faces? See how afraid they are? See how hopeless they looked? Their lives are in your hands. Isn’t it great? Isn’t it wonderful? You get to prove yourself, prove that you’re just as good as your brother. Isn’t it fun? Isn’t it amazing? It’s delightful–”
Hostages. But why, I wonder?

The feeling of Ane’s fist sinking into the man’s face was euphoric, but he didn’t dwell on that feeling for too long when Crude stumbled back with a chuckle. You’re a scum,” he said. “An absolutely disgusting monster... Taking people away from their homes, scaring them, hurting them… you’re a disgrace, a freak. Not even my brother would condone such behaviour for even more than a few seconds. I hate you!”
Missing quotation before "You're a scum"

Just how bad do you think June IS Ane? :wowzard:

For a second, he thought he saw something resembling hurt flashing in those golden eyes, but he dismissed it when the freak merely grinned and cackled like a maniac. “Hahaha! You’re a riot! Absolutely amazing! If I’d known you would react like this, I would’ve shown this to ya sooner. Hahaha! This is great! Now, this will be a lot more entertaining!” He snapped his fingers, spawning a tablet in his hand before tossing it towards Ane. “Here’s a map of the entire city! Free of charge! Now I’m gonna get going, ‘kay? Have fun messing with the trials. I know I did when I was making them!”

He blinked out of existence just in time for the tablet to sail through the air. It crashed onto the ground, its form still pristine and clean despite the impact.
Still almost as enigmatic as before...

Ane growled. “Fucking piece of crap,” he said, picking up the tablet and taking a calming breath. He never thought he could hate someone so much. His breaths came through gritted teeth as he turned around, expression softening as he made his way over to the fox.

She held a fearful look on her face as she stared at where the rift had stood. It had vanished the moment Crude disappeared. Zeal jumped before relaxing when she realised it was just Ane.
Realized misspelled? Ugh, I bet its a British thing again. I'll just ignore spelling errors from now on...


“Ane,” she said, turning to face him. Her eyes were wide and pleading, and a little frown on her snout. “We-we have to save them! My friends… that human… they… we have to help them!”

Ane held back a sigh as he stared into those bright blue eyes. Curse his weakness for cute animals. “Alright, let’s go and save your friends, Zeal.” The brightened expression on her face was almost worth the pain he knew he would feel.
Yeah, you had no chance of saying 'no' there Ane. :mewlulz:

Don’t get him wrong though, he would’ve made the same decision regardless. He couldn’t very well turn down a request to help anyone. It was mostly the fact that he basically had no choice in this that frustrated him.

But whatever. His shoulders sagged as he glanced around. He would and could power through it like he always had. Ane took a step forward, his expression building into a hard determined glare.

He entered the city with Zeal following behind.
I would say his determination is justified here. If Crude wanted Ane dead, Ane would have been dead a long time ago. So, this must be something within Ane's abilities to overcome.

The air of the city weighed with an eerie stillness. What should be a place full of bustling people and noises was now a desolate land with buildings staring down from above. The grey sky above scrutinised him and the motionless false clouds billowed with no winds.
I would have said "how eerie" but you already used that word to describe it above. :mewlulz:

Ane glanced around, his paws gripping the tablet still after so much difficulty doing so. A repetitive hum from the drone echoed through the city, their only reprieve from absolute silence.

From the corner of his eye, Zeal wandered about, barely staying in the drone’s general vicinity. A childlike wonder plagued her very being as she glanced at every little thing, her mouth agape as she took it all in.

They’d been following the drone for several minutes now. If it weren’t for the flashing key icon in the tablet’s map, he would’ve thought it was leading them nowhere. The drone moved slowly, only barely faster than they could walk. He was grateful though as he still hadn’t quite gotten used to his body yet.
Ok so THIS is likely why he didn't produce some electricity to light up the void earlier.

The drone, with its non-stop humming, led them down the corner and through a gate where they found themselves in a small section of the city where trees and plants ruled freely. Walking through the fenced gate and down the smooth path, the two found the drone hovering above a statue. Like the world around them, it was grey and built to resemble some sort of bipedal fox. Its whiskers were structured in a way where they looked to be flowing, and in its claws were two spoons. There was also a sign on the podium it stood on, but Ane didn’t pay it much attention.
An Alakazam? Could it have a connection to the one we say in Stuffy's backstory?

When he caught its gaze, Ane bit back a shudder. It was like it was staring right into his soul. The creature’s body looked frail but as he stared at it longer, something about it felt off and there. His ears twitched and he stumbled back, something was growling.

It was Zeal.

The animalistic snarl didn’t seem to fit right on her face as she glared at the statue, her fur standing on end as she leaned down, looking ready to pounce. The contrast between her previous self was honestly disturbing and, if not for her facing the glowing–

The statue was… was glowing!

“Get down!” Zeal yelled and before he could even react, he was tackled down as something flew by him, narrowly missing him as it hit a tree, blowing it into smithereens.
Yikes! :copyka:

Ane stared at the destruction, mouth agape, his mind barely registering Zeal getting off of him. Th-that almost killed him… He gulped, shakily getting onto his feet and biting back a scream when he saw something coming out of the statue.
Well. So much for this being a guaranteed non-deadly errand!

Hollow, unnatural wisps of smoke leaked out of the statue’s eyes and mouth. Its stony features contorted and twisted into a face of agony as more and more smoke leaked out, coalescing into a suffocating mass. A chill ran down his spine when he noticed that it looked like it was screaming. Its body trembled, quivering as something took shape, the mass grew and grew, hovering, wavering, shivering as it moved around unbound by the laws of nature. His mind felt heavy, tethered by an unforeseen weight that threatened to crush him.

Yellow, pupil-less eyes glowed through the foggy body, embers continued to leak and surround its body before finally solidifying.

Ane couldn’t believe his eyes. What was happening? What was this thing and–

“... Quil?” The word came from his lips in a disbelieving murmur.

There the creature stood, its form an eerie replica of his brother. From the shape of his bulb down to the weird mark on his forehead, the wispy copy of his brother stared into him, his yellow pupil-less glowing with hatred that threatened to burn the world alive.

And when his mouth opened, two voices spoke as one, an echo of unison as they turned to him and Zeal.
Quil finally ate one too many extra-dimensional mushrooms it seems. :unquag:

On a serious note, I have no clue what is happening here. Lovely place to cliffhang for over half a year with no new chapter yet! *hint hint, nudge nudge*

A chapter with Crude is never a boring one.

So, I'm surprised we didn't see anything else happen with Neo and Peach. I was expecting them to pop back up or tie into something else in the chapter. Oh well, I'm sure they will pop back up at some point.

But yeah, what the heck is going on with Quil (or NOT Quil)? I'm guessing it actually IS Quil or the chapter title would make no sense.

Zeal is so unbelievably adorable! Is Zeal my favorite character??? :eyes: Oh man, but you have multiple good characters though! Prance and Evie were great too, but... hmmm. Zeal might be my favorite character in your fic. Great job with Zeal! (I'm a sucker for cute characters, I guess)

Well, now I know why you weren't able to come to their rescue. You weren't in Crude's barrier. You are in the actual spaces between. Yikes. :copyka:

And there we have it. I am CAUGHT UP on JaND! :veelove:
 

ShiniGojira

Multiversal Extraordinaire
Location
Stranded In The Gaps between Multiverses
Pronouns
He/him/they/her
Partners
  1. froslass
  2. zorua-gojira
  3. salandit-shiny
  4. goomy
Hello and thanks again for the review! Always enjoyed reading how you feel about the chapter!

Peach is a powerhouse. :mewlulz:

I must admit I have no clue what is going on with the Exeggutor. Curious to see where this leads!
So, for a bit of context since I'm sure you've mostly forgotten about the details. This Exeggutor is Professor Oak's and was ordered to look over on the three brothers until they reached Viridian City, Peach found it unconscious and... yeah let's just say it had an unpleasant meeting with Crude.
Hmm! So, it's interesting that we get to see Neo, who is another Pokefied human apart from the three brothers. Makes me wonder what Neo's backstory is.
Yup! I thought it'd be fun to show another Poké-fied guy other than the three bros.

I also originally planned to explore his backstory in a separate spinoff but that's kinda been shoved into the pit since I was too distracted by other stuff at the time.
Hate to say it, but Pikachu doesn't exactly look like the most masculine of mon... :mewlulz:
What? Of course, Pikachu's the manliest mon there is! I mean, haven't you seen the captain Pikachu in that new anime? He's an aura-farming god!
You might not know what she looks like, but you know that she is small and soft. What more do you need?

I have to say, Zeal is pushing all the right buttons. I like her already.

How do you DO that so frequently with your characters, Shini?
The secret ingredient is trauma
Something to be said for meeting someone for the first time in complete darkness. What a nifty concept! I love how it cuts through the fluff and gets right to some substantial bonding so quickly. Totally doesn't seem like it should work, but it does!
Thanks! Writing this scene was also fun and challenging since you know, I couldn't really rely on body language and stuff to convey their emotions but I'm glad it turned out great!
I think you're lying Crude. You don't have a degree in that. There isn't a college that teaches it! If you REALLY do, then break the forth wall in Shini's reply to this review and correct me. I dare you.
Offended, Crud takes out a literal table out of nowhere and slams a framed slip of paper on it:

"Hah! Checkmate, Atheist! I do have a degree in Multiversal Travel!"
What is THIS?! Crude has someone he has to answer to?! :wowzard:
Technically a yes and a no at the same time.
Hmm, maybe not a superior but an associate or sorts?
Superior? A bit questionable. An associate? Very much so.
Ok so THIS is likely why he didn't produce some electricity to light up the void earlier.
Yup, as you can see I really hate the troupe where the person who ends up in another body can somehow instantly figure out how to use their body's magic stuff without any consequences
Well. So much for this being a guaranteed non-deadly errand!
What's life without risk of bodily harm and/or a potential death?
On a serious note, I have no clue what is happening here. Lovely place to cliffhang for over half a year with no new chapter yet! *hint hint, nudge nudge*
I, uh may or may not have the next chapter pretty much ready and only really needs a beta-reader to go through it...

Anyway, that should be it from me. Really appreciate your thoughts and feedback so far! Hope you have a nice day!
 

133TFR33k

Creator of the Doduo Alliance
Location
Somewhere beyond the Nexus
Pronouns
He/him
Partners
  1. doduo
Hello and thanks again for the review! Always enjoyed reading how you feel about the chapter!
:veelove:

So, for a bit of context since I'm sure you've mostly forgotten about the details. This Exeggutor is Professor Oak's and was ordered to look over on the three brothers until they reached Viridian City, Peach found it unconscious and... yeah let's just say it had an unpleasant meeting with Crude.
Ah! Ok, yes I very much completely forgot that. Maybe because the Exeggutor wasn't featured very much or in very significant ways.

I also originally planned to explore his backstory in a separate spinoff but that's kinda been shoved into the pit since I was too distracted by other stuff at the time.
Well, it's not like you are running out of ideas of stuff to write, so this is probably an acceptable casualty.

What? Of course, Pikachu's the manliest mon there is! I mean, haven't you seen the captain Pikachu in that new anime? He's an aura-farming god!
:mewlulz:

The secret ingredient is trauma
That does seem to be the case, huh?

Thanks! Writing this scene was also fun and challenging since you know, I couldn't really rely on body language and stuff to convey their emotions but I'm glad it turned out great!
Yeah, that does sound tricky.

Offended, Crud takes out a literal table out of nowhere and slams a framed slip of paper on it:

"Hah! Checkmate, Atheist! I do have a degree in Multiversal Travel!"
Atheist? I suppose that means you fancy yourself as some kind of God.

That paper doesn't really prove anything though. With powers like yours, you easily could have just conjured it up from nothing.

I suppose if there WAS a college that taught that, it wouldn't be a stretch that you had a degree in it. Still, this suggests that there are those who are stronger and/or smarter than you from which you learn. Quite a fascinating concept considering how powerful you seem to be. If you are 'a God', it would seem you are not without limits.

Technically a yes and a no at the same time.

Superior? A bit questionable. An associate? Very much so.
Interesting.

Yup, as you can see I really hate the troupe where the person who ends up in another body can somehow instantly figure out how to use their body's magic stuff without any consequences
Makes sense.

What's life without risk of bodily harm and/or a potential death?
Apparently! :unquag:

I, uh may or may not have the next chapter pretty much ready and only really needs a beta-reader to go through it...
A beta reader? Oh no! Where could you POSSIBLY find one of those? If only there were someone willing to offer! :eyes:

I'd be willing if it works for you.

Anyway, that should be it from me. Really appreciate your thoughts and feedback so far! Hope you have a nice day!
Always a pleasure providing thoughts for your fics.
 

K_S

Unrepentent Giovanni and Rocket fan
Cantip
(apologies written via cell phone in bits and pieces)

Life was pain.

Ohh thats an ominous intro...

His mind was in pure agony, like someone had tossed it into a blender, blended it into a nice mixed stew, and forcefully glued every piece back into the wrong place. His skin felt dry like laundry after three days of floundering in the flipping desert and taking a small dive into a volcano. And his body was too warm, too hot, too…

Stew? Well at least thats got semi solid chunks. Slurry (mainly fluid) would be more ominous...

What? I have a blender, it was a slow day...

Royal case pf sunburn atop the general state of ouch, i guess?

God, everything hurt.











And then it didn't. The pain subsided, and every ache, hurt and discomfort vanished, leaving him highly aware of everything.

And also leavimg the canny suspicious... like a nice pile of health items and defense ups before a big room...

His back lay on something soft, winds brushing against his skin

Well glad the pain was off when the wind kicked in...

and something was grazing his limbs, feeling as soft as the thing underneath him.

Due to both the fact its under pov as well as taller, not a source of heat,and grazing vs scratcjing.... i'm gunna guess grassy background, well grassy thing on backside then?

Opening his eyes, he hissed in pain, shutting them and turning away from the light assaulting him.

Ah.pains back again?

(Attempts.cumbrrbatchs barotone and fails beyond words)

Well pains an old friend...

(Sorry it sounded better in my head...)

Slowly, he covered his eyes with an arm, getting on his hind quarters and looking around… where were his walls?

Interesting choice of words. Guessong pov is not human then.

Weird. Was he on a grassy bed? Had he slept here? Wait, no that wasn't important!

Mmm state upon awakening and familiaroty are kinda important for backtracking. So i'd argue... and guess our pov is a bit rash vs detail orientated...

Where the hell was he? Screwing his eyes together, he surveyed his surroundings, eyes scanning the grass around him, the grass that absolutely towered over him. Jeez, how the hell could grass grow as tall as him, let alone taller?

Laughs. Alright that was a pretty funny tall grass nod. On the other hand theres a bit of word repitions. We got eyes 3x in the last paragraph. Grass(land) also is getting a simular over abundemce of use.

Its not, wrong per say, but it did catch my attention. I bolded the culprist id you were interested in cleaning them out...


He was one of the tallest in his class so unless he'd woken up in a post-apocalyptic grassland or…



Something drew his attention, it was vibrant and orange, hovering slightly above his eyes.

Wondering how he didnt see this obstructoin above his eyes sooner?

Squinting, he moved to swat the object away and stopped, eyes tailing the object as it moved.



He had felt it move… Like it was connected to him. His eyes lowered to his left and down to his arm. It was orange and scaly. His arm was orange and scaly. Like a lizard. And just like a lizard, it ended into a three-digit claw.

So, guessing povs a Charmander. Per the descriptor of the prev bedding I kinda suspected they were a pmd advwnture guild (whatever your fan and or canon region they hopped from).


What the hell? What the hell? What was happening? What was going on? What was going on? His breaths came in quick and shallow, his chest – his cream-coloured belly and chest – heaving and his throat constricting. Where was he? Why was he a lizard? What was going on? Was that a tail? He had a tail? Why was it on fire? Why was it–

Hmm i wonder if he was a diferent mon previously. Being mon'itized once is a wild road trip... but twice? Ouch.

Also getting a "doesnt like lizards" vibe here....

He gripped his head, ignoring the way his claws dug into his scalp (his very scaly and skinless scalp), and took a deep breath to calm himself, biting down the urge to scream until he croaked. He needed to calm down and figure out whatever the fish-sticks was going on.

Laughs. Fishsticks? Is thier human identity steve rogers?

Calming, deep breaths. Empty those thoughts. Empty your mind. Deep breaths, release the stress, relieve them, empty them… empty them… empty them–



"What the actual fuck is going on?"

I think p.o.v. kinda failed meditation 101 here...

He leaned back, screaming into the heavens, his claws digging deeper into his scales. His scream pierced the heavens, though it didn't seem like many had noticed his little outburst. Panting and leaning down on his knees, the tension in his body felt lighter, no longer feeling like there was a submarine crushing his shoulders but instead like he was lifting an elephant over his head.

From word choice i suspect our pov was definitly human recently...ish...

He flexed his claws, having something to focus on would help. Deep breaths, deep breaths. He couldn't very well begin a plan if he continued to panic. He needed to be calm… calm… calm…



Calm… He let out a breath, clapping his face and allowing his emotions to chill along with his too-warm breath. No more thoughts. No more screaming. He was in a new body, in a new place but he was fine. Fine fine fine fine…

I'm alive w curiousity w how he handled this last time... because this ones been a trip.

With his heart partially calmed, he could finally start paying attention to the things around him and– urk! He couldn't hold back the urge to cringe as his mind played the last few seconds over and over.



… okay, he was so not gonna mention any of this to Ane or Quil. God knew how they'd react to him breaking his strict 'No swearing' rule.

Possibly some mockery, understandong, passing of money between each other depending what swears were wagered on... the ususal sib like behavior.

He shook his head. Alright, now that he was no longer panicking — no, his fin-claws were not trembling, they weren't! — he could finally assess his situation and say that he had absolutely no idea what to do.



He was a lizard and if the theory bouncing off his head was anything, he was very likely a Charmander and probably in the Pokémon world, no matter how weird or impossible that sounded.



This was fine. Everything was fine. Why wouldn't it be?



He was fine.

Hes in progress to movong to denial, possible local population 2 more,dependong on how his friends are reacting...

… It wasn't like he had gone to bed and dozed off to sleep a few minutes ago.



Actually, now that he thought about it, he was probably still dreaming and none of this was happening. He wasn't a Charmander and he was definitely not standing in the middle of nowhere, in the Pokémon world as a Charmander. Because that'd be ridiculous.



It didn't matter whether he could feel the grass brushing against his scales or hear the sound of winds blowing against any nearby trees, and it didn't matter how good the sun's warmth felt or how crispy and fresh the air tasted. This was fake. None of this was real. Not even the little voice in the back of his mind could stop him from denying his situation.

Guys built.a mansi9n in the lands of denail. Wonder what the rent rates are these days...

This was all fake. Everything was a dream.



And he had a brilliant idea that could prove it once and for all.



Pain. Every creature could and had experienced pain in some form or capacity, and it was said that dreams could never quite replicate the same feeling. Which was usually correct, any deaths or pain he'd had in dreams were always muted or felt… distant. So he reasoned that if he inflicted pain onto this body, he could very well prove to himself that this was a dream and then do whatever lucid dreamers usually do.

So is he going to stub a toe/talon. Bite a finger, poke himself w a talon?

Luckily, he already had a weapon in hand, or well claw (two claws to be exact… wait, did his feet count as claws or…), and considering that claws were supposed to be sharp, it was perfect. He just had to tear through his flesh and scales with these claws that on closer inspection, gleamed rather dangerously in the light. Yes, these sharp and vicious claws that were clearly meant for cutting through prey and killing…



On second thought, this was a really, really stupid idea. If this was real, he might–



"Ack! Son of a–" There was so much blood, so much… so much blood.

Yeah... i was hoping he'd just pinch himself here but guess not. Snorts. Not the sharpest seord in the armory... though if this is his second round being mon'ified i kinda wanna compare/contrast last round.

Also from the lack of screams i assume his sibs/friends are much less wound up than mr fire tail...

His claws were sharp, much sharper than he thought they'd be. They tore through the soft scales on his underbelly cleanly, like he’d introduced a glowing cleaver through a dry chunk of meat.

Why would a cleaver glow? You mean it was qhite hot perhaps?

And it hurt. It hurt. It hurt. It hurt.


His eyes teared up, blurry vision locked onto the warm liquid dripping from his claws.

Freak out totally understandable. Wondee if hw'll scream some more?

Dreading, he glanced down, paling at the sight, and feeling bile crawling its way into his throat. He pressed his untainted claw against the wound and panted, eyes closed and applying as much pressure as he could through the pain.



He was an idiot, a bloody moronic idiot! Gah, it burns it hurts… Why did he think this was a good idea? Oh god, what was wrong with him... Why didn't he come up with a better idea? “Irk…” How was this real?



How could any of this be real?

The power of fanfic... seriously idk i just write here... blame shin'

And with that final thought, he collapsed onto the ground, groaning from the fire swirling in his chest,

Literally or the stress plus injury feels like hoq he imagines fire swirlijg around would feel? How does fire swirl? Its not eaxctly a fluid...

a claw still pressing onto the wound as he took in breath after breath, employing something he learned a while ago. Disconnect himself from the pain, take deep breaths, and focus on something else. He'd done it multiple times on smaller wounds before and it worked with varying levels of success. With each breath, the pain lessened, dulling down to a quiet manageable sting.



Blinking, he stared into the sky above, mind swirling with thoughts. Now what? He had deduced that this wasn't a dream. What was the next step? Find a trainer? A professor?

Pray its not an aspiring rocket (guessing this is kanto from him being a charmander...)

Well, it was probably better if he looked for clues on his whereabouts as well as what version of the world he was in.

And maybe if he isnt alone?

Was he in the anime? The games? Mystery Dungeon? Or the manga? Oh God, he hoped this wasn't the manga. The things he heard about…

HEY! the mangas perfectly fine... if you dont mind deep psychological scars and stay out of unova, hoenn, kalos and sevii...
Maybe silph... does some tjinkong. Actial if this is the gold/silver arch aviod goldenrod, its loke a zombie appocolypelse w ferals at the end... and mt. Morter... that mountian and its trainer should be avoided at all costs-

Alrigjt fine the mangas pretty bloody distopian.

He shuddered. Okay, let's not focus on negative thoughts right now. Just look on the bright side. If he was lucky, he would be in the anime world where cartoon physics and friendship reigned supreme. On the other hand, he could also be in the game world which would… be challenging since it depended on which iteration and interpretation, and anything could happen. Mystery Dungeon was maybe the next best choice as long as he wasn't chosen to save some world-ending shiz.

Has there ever been a human thrust into the mon world that was allowed to peacefully coast... like ever? Hes doomed, on the flip side his going rate for rentals in that mansion by de-nial are quite nice. Need a roommate?

Who knows. Maybe this wouldn't be so bad. Getting up, he sighed, ignoring the pain that came with the slight motion. He better head out and explore, any clue of his location was better than nothing. God damn it, why did he have to turn into a Charmander of all things? Couldn't whatever deity that sent him here have kept him human? Walking with a new limb behind him was so weird. It was as if he had a dead unresponsive arm attached to him that could still feel every little thing he touched, whether it be the grass, the dirt, or even just the air, and that wasn't mentioning the crackling behind him. He had to resist the urge to look back after having done so five times already.



Left foot-claw thingy. Right foot-claw thingy. Left foot-claw thingy. Right-foot claw thingy.



If he had longer legs, navigating through the tall grass wouldn't be nearly as much of a hassle than it currently was and especially not when that hassle was only further perpetuated by the damn wound and blasted tail swinging behind him!

I'm surprised that a) he isnt hoping. Legs bunched like that naturally probably wpuld be awesom at hopping. B) he hasnt started a bleeding fire yet.

But before he could turn around and give his tail a piece of his mind

Theres a rare sentence ..

, a familiar sound crept into his ears. It sounded like a groan, a groan that he was all too familiar with despite the higher pitch.

... i could ask so many question right now. I'll be nice and point out that theres 2x groans hanging out right next to each other.

Ane? He turned to where he heard the sound. A faint hope sparkled in him. Was his brother here with him too?

His brother? Well at least hes got one familiar (if helium consuming) face

Although the logical side of him wanted to dismiss that, he couldn't say he wasn't curious to try even if it did result in him having his hopes dashed away and destroyed.



Welp, off to find out! Brushing apart the tall grass,

Is he"cuting" it via hm move or just pushing on it and power walking over it w his bunchy legs?


he marched onward, with only a vague sense of direction leading the way. He had to move slowly to not further antagonise his injury and also because his short legs didn't give him much of a choice.

Gotta agree w June (i read ahead to get the name btw) how can any charmander have a speed+nature... those legs!

After sweeping aside several blades in this grassy jungle, he stumbled onto a sight that left him puzzled.



A Pikachu lay there on the ground, face scrunched up in pain. Was this Pikachu his brother? He circled the unconscious Pokémon, eyes scrutinizing every inch of it. Was this really Ane? It looked… cute. Way too cute to be his brother.

Someones a pika fan. Guess ane's in the "everythi g hurts" stage w a dose of "why does this headache feel familiar?

Out of curousoty, is Ane the younger or older brother?

Also... ane as in familiar shorthand for anekin?

The Pikachu stirred and groaned, and he backed up, just in case. He wasn't gonna get caught unprepared because he was too curious for his own good. If this wasn't his brother, then he'd run as fast as he could… which, now that he thought about it, wouldn't really mean much when considering just how fast a Pikachu could be.

... but a pikas speed is just a stat... maybe this one will be as uncordinated as June is now?

Huh… crud. Maybe if he was lucky, he could scare it off with his tail. Fires scared animals, right? Ugh, why didn't he think things through before going along with his plans?

Fire... is going to scare the mon thats a walking, talking lightning bolt? Yeeeeah so i see Junes hosting this part at denial, were gunna fish our own sushi and get tans on the bank...

As if you had any plans, to begin with, a snarky side of his mind quipped which he muted and ignored.

He treats his (possibly w psychic types being a thing this might not just be a mental niggle) like a bad forum member. He seriously forum moderater-ed a fragment of his own psyche?

Well that's one way to do it....

Well, it was too late to start thinking of a plan now, he had to hope that this Pikachu was who he thought it was.



The Pikachu gripped its head with a paw, moaning in pain as it stood up on two. Slowly, it looked around, and after a short bout of fluttering its eyes, it locked sight on him. Glancing into its eyes, he could see a million thoughts running through its mind before it finally settled on a word.



"What the fuc–"



Make that three words.



"Hey, hey, hey! Language!" Yup, there was no doubt in his mind now, this was Ane.



Ane's brows furrowed in disbelief. "June? Is that you?"



June grinned, giving him a victory sign with his claws. "Who do ya think it is?"



"Yo-you're a lizard…"



"A Charmander actually," he said, "and you're a Pikachu."



"A Charman–" Ane shook his head, fixing him with a glare. "What the hell do you mean you're a Pokémon? And what–" He finally took notice of the paw attached to him and with a deep breath, took a short glance at his brother and back to his paw, and back to his brother. "What did you do?"

Love how the kneejerk reaction is to
A) swear
B) blame big? Brother



June blinked. "Excuse me? Why do you think I have something to do with this?"



"As if you don't know." Ane pointed at him with an angry jab. "Whenever something like this happens, you're usually the one that caused it!"

Again gotta wonder at junes history here...

"What? How the hell can I cause something like this? I'm not the one that–ack, frick," June hissed in pain, the wound on his chest opening slightly at his sudden movements with blood slowly seeping out. Crap, completely forgot about it.



Noticing his brother's injury, Ane halted his accusations, a softer look crossing his face. "Hey, are you okay? That–what the hell happened to you?"



Stupid mistakes, that's what… but at least it wasn't as bad as earlier. June shut an eye, forcing a grin onto his muzzle. "It's fine. Just overreacted earlier when I got here. These claws were sharper than I expected. It looks a lot worse than it is." And it was true! His wound was only bleeding a little bit, not as crazy as earlier! If It weren't for how fast his new body could heal, he’d probably be keeling over and crying by now.



"Overreacted?" Ane shot him a disbelieving look. "You cut yourself? Why on Earth would you do that?"



"Like I said, I overreacted and paid the price," June repeated. "God, this hurts a lot more than that time I tripped on an escalator." Blood had gone everywhere, not dissimilar from his current situation and he still had a scar on his leg because of the mistake of his youth… though he guessed he didn't have that scar now in his new body which… oh god, please don't tell him this was gonna be his body's version of that accident. No matter how cool he'd look with them, he did not want his body to be littered with literal scars of his mistakes.



"Paid the price… jeez, this actually makes me feel a little sorry for you."



"Frick off… fatty-chu."

No hw shpuld of swung with the surprised pika face. Theres so many oportunities to troll with that meme and he missed his first one...

"And now I'm feeling less sorry for you." Ane glowered before shaking his head with a sigh. "Come on, let's go and find someone that can help you."



June raised a claw, stopping the Pikachu in his tracks and quietly wincing at the pain. "As much as I like that idea. Why don't we check and see if Quil's with us here? I mean, with you and me here. Doesn't that mean there's a chance Quil could also be here?"

Quil?

"I don't know. Maybe?" Ane shrugged. "You sure you'll be fine though?"



He nodded. "This body can heal fast… I think. It wasn't as bad as it was earlier." June waved him off. "I'll be fine." Catching his brother's hesitant nod, June spun around and pushed apart the nearby grass and… huh. Guess he could scratch 'See a Bulbasaur on two legs' out of his metaphorical bucket list.



"Quil?" he called out.



No response.



But what response did he need from a spaced-out Bulbasaur walking on two?

Two legs I suppose? Looks like Quil is more out of it then all the other cast... put together... that's.. a little alarming.

"Hey, Quil! Quil! Hello? You there, buddy?" He ran over to the walking frog-gasaur with Ane not far behind, a claw still pressed on his wound as he reached his brother. "Hey, Quil. Guess you woke up before us, huh?"



Still no reply. Weird.



June snapped his claws, waving them right in front of the Grass-type's eyes. That elicited a response as the Bulbasaur jumped back, nearly falling over before righting himself. "Sheesh, thought I was gonna have to pull out a gong for you to hear me."



The Bulbasaur blinked, looking at him with a bewildered stare and not so subtly looking at the wound on his chest. "June?"



"God, it was weird having Ane say my name earlier. Now, you too? Whatever happened with just 'brother'?"



"Ane's here too?" Quil glanced around.



"Yeah, he's the panting Pikachu in that bush over there," June said, facing the arriving Pikachu with a grin. "Man, you really need to exercise more."

It's low level amusing that the casts ah... more sedentary natures are affecting their mon bodies. That sorta makes it a pretty funny spin on why they might be level one. No clue what they're doing meets too much online gaming/sedentary lifestyle...

"Frick you. You're lucky… you have a body that can run like a… person."



June shrugged before returning his attention to Quil. "You're taking this a lot better than I expected. Really makes me feel embarrassed for screaming earlier."

Kinda low key slot as to how a bulbasaur's body... with the bulb and clearly built for four legs, is coping with two-legged locomotion...

"That was you?" Quil said, still in that same slow, disbelieving tone. Just what was so unbelievable? Aside from the whole 'turning into fictional characters', of course.



"Yeah, not my proudest moment," said June, scratching his cheek. "Anywho, now that we're all here" – which I totally called it – "Why don't we try figuring out where we are?"



"And how do you suppose we do that?" Ane asked, arms crossed and brow raised.



"I don't know, maybe by following this path! Duh." He pointed at the path off to the side, ignoring his brother's miffed reaction.



June didn't know where it would lead them and for the average Joe, it was probably best to be a bit more wary. But he was never one to like dwelling on his thoughts, not when his brothers were around and needed him. This was the Pokémon world, a place where tons of kids dreamt of being in. There were so many things to see, so many things to experience. They could become trainers, be rich, famous, have an awesome bloody team full of friends and whatnot!

They could be caught and shoved headfirst into the wonder trade system... or hooked to a trainer who doesn't know their type chart... can anyone understand them or just "other" mon, because that's going to be a misadventure all it's own if language is a barrier.

Ah! He could barely hold himself back, his face creasing as a large grin appeared.

Huh didn't expect Mr. firetail to be so optimistic, his tune definitely changes when he's got his big brother mode activated... maybe they're in the anime verse and it's catchy.... things seem less dangerous in that iteration (minus the ORIGINS version, mind)


"Come on, my brothers. Onward to adventure!"







And adventure they went.



… If you could call walking down a dirt path with nothing happening, an adventure that is. Seriously, you'd think getting transported to the Pokémon world would be somewhat interesting. But between this and his freakout of being turned, nothing bloody happened.



Well, that wasn't true. Dark clouds started forming a couple of minutes ago, but they were likely far enough to where they weren't an immediate threat.



Hiking up the small hill, he spotted a dark green signboard next to a tree and some bushes. Upon reaching the sign, surprise once again bore its way into his head. The words were in Japanese, a language that while he dabbled a bit into and could recognize a few kanji thanks to similar words in Chinese, he was very inept in. So he was shocked at how seamless and coherent it looked. Like something was pouring information into his mind as he read the text. He could understand the fricking thing. What the hell? Where was this thing when he needed it back home?



"Huh, weird," Ane commented.



Weird indeed. June raised a scaly brow, trying to comprehend how any of this worked. The words were definitely still in the Japanese but he could read it like it was English, he could understand the verb, the noun, the kanji like they were second nature. It was a bit jarring if he was honest.

Well at least the settings higher powers aren't making the cast pick up a new language the slow/natural way... granted what else is being added in, or possibly deleted... wonder if it'll cross anyone else's mind...

If only I had this ability back home.

Never mind that idea...


He gave the sign a slightly annoyed stare before shrugging. It was likely working on some magic bullcrap and he wasn't going to get anywhere focusing on it.



"So, Pallet Town's just up ahead," Ane said, sounding less like he was making a statement and more like a complaint as he continued. "... three hundred meters ahead."



Rolling his eyes at his brother's whine about the unreasonable distance, June remarked with a grin. "Well, you could certainly use the exercise. You look almost as chonky as Ash's Pikachu back in season one."

At least it's not the red version, that mouse was a ball with bunny ears...

Ane growled. "Says the one that slashed themselves like an idiot."



"Hey, that was a completely normal reaction and I feel one hundred percent justified by it," June harrumphed. "'sides you're one to talk. Seriously, who blames someone for something like this." He gestured to himself and their surroundings.



Scoffing, Ane shook his head and glared at him. "After all the things you've done, I wouldn't be surprised if you somehow got us roped into this mess!"



Excuse me?



"What's that supposed to mean?" June cried out.



"It–"



Quil got in between them, shoving them away and landing back on all fours as he glared at them. "Hey, cut it out, you two. Someone's coming and as much as I enjoy this stupid back-and-forth, I don't want to explain why two idiots were fighting!"



Taking a second to recover, June bit down a retort concerning Quil's sporadic moments of lucidity before turning to see what he meant. He squinted his eyes, and the all-too-clear image of a vaguely familiar red hat came to view, he also could hear a voice too. It sounded like the person was complaining to a–



His eyes widened as realization struck. Quickly, he grabbed the two and shoved them into a nearby bush, ignoring their protests and cries as he hopped in, grabbing his tail in a manner that sparked some discomfort in his chest.



"Hey, what's the big–"



"Shh!" He levelled the two with a glare that prevented any further complaints before peering through the leaves and spotting the treasure of the island.



Right there, in all his glory was a ten-year-old boy pulling a Pikachu with a rope. And it wasn't just any ordinary ten-year-old boy, no, it was the yet-to-be master himself, Ash Ketchum.

Well, that's confirmation they are in the anime verse... at least they missed gary and his fangirl tag along... right?

Although the boy pulled with no hesitance down the path, it took a lot more patience than he'd normally cared to commit, just watching the kid. But eventually the trainer and mon left the area and he sprung out of the bush, arm raised to the sky as he struck a pose. "Haha! Guess who just found out what world this is!" He pointed at himself with two claws, though his chest did hurt at that movement, he was too excited to care. "This guy right here, that's right!"



"Excuse me?" Ane asked.



"You're excused." June chuckled at his brother's deadpan glare. "We're in the anime-verse and we just had a close brush with Ash Ketchum himself."



"Wait, wait. You mean the main character went past us and we didn't ask him for help? What the–why the hell didn't we ask for his help?"



"He was pulling Pikachu with a rope, meaning we're in episode one," June said, shrugging, "And I don't know about you but I don't wanna deal with any butterfly effects this early."



"Butterfly effect?"



"Y'know, small changes can make big boom boom? I don't wanna be the reason the world ended because I messed up the timeline." Though by following that logic, wouldn't that mean their presence alone already changed something? Hm… yeah, better pin that thought on the 'Care about it later' list.



Ane sighed. "I guess that makes sense."



"Glad we've come to an agreement then." June nodded. Moving on, he glanced back at the bush. Quil still hadn't come out… weird.



Oh, wait, never mind. There he was, still looking as spaced out as he did a little while ago. Strange how the only time he looked aware of things was when he and Ane were arguing. He didn't remember Quil always being this out of it.



… well, add another to the list then.



June blinked, the uncomfortable sensation of something wet mixing with his scales jolted him back to reality. Looking up to the sky, he spotted the dark clouds hovering above them ominously, and though it was barely enough to be called a drizzle, he soon realized what that meant.



Tail flame and rain, and this was episode one...



"Crap, it's gonna be a storm! Quick! Run for your lives!"

It's a nice introduction of the delicate nature of their situation... as well as the pragmatic dangers of.. being a fire lizard with a flaming tail in a setting that gets a lot of rain. The cast is going to have to invest in an umbrella bare minimum...





Wiping the sweat off his brow, the man laid the device on the table. He leaned back, popping his back and joints with a relieved sigh. It had been a couple of hours since those trainers left his laboratory and he was glad to see that they all made it safely in Viridian City.



And as expected, his grandson, Gary, was the first to arrive, boasting about all the Pokémon he caught over the check-in call. It certainly was quite an accomplishment, ten catches in a day.



Ah, that took him back to when he caught his first Pokémon and the challenges he set for himself all those years ago. He recalled it was something ridiculous, fifty by the end of the week… He chuckled. Glad to see the apple didn't fall far from the tree.



Though the calls with the other trainers weren't as eventful, except for one or two of them catching a Pidgey, he was still happy to see that they were all safe and sound… well, all but one that is.



He glanced out the window, at the drizzle that slowly intensified. Ash Ketchum, his grandson's rival and someone he suspected of doing great things since the day he met the boy. The child was a cheerful and joyful lad, with a great tenacity for learning all things Pokémon. It was a little worrying when he took on that Pikachu but he had faith in the young boy, he was sure they'd do fine.



Thunder boomed in the background, as a small smile graced his cheeks. Sighing, Professor Oak closed the door behind him and made his way to his living room. On his way, he brewed up a nice warm cup of tea and took a book he'd last read halfway, off a shelf. He intended to use the calm silence provided to him and use it fully to relax and enjoy the weather. The tension in his muscles loosened as he listened in on the tapping sounds of rain, it was a gentle song that was once the bane of his youth but he'd grown to love and enjoy over his prime.



Memories of a time when he and his Pokémon had to hide under a makeshift tent came to his mind, he remembered the feeling of his friends huddling up together, keeping each other warm and dry to the best of their ability. Oh, where did the time go?



Though there was an incessant knocking, like knuckles rapping on a door that he couldn't quite fit in his memories. It was almost as if…



… oh wait, that was his door.



Someone was knocking on his door.



Why on earth was someone knocking on his door? In the middle of a storm? And not in their homes like a sensible person?



The knocking intensified and he sighed, placing his cup and book on the table. "Yes, yes, I'm coming. Hold your horses," he murmured, tugging on his lab coat and adjusting it.



Making his way over, he gripped the doorknob and twisted, opening it to reveal… rain. Nothing but the rain on his porch, and winds buffeting his used-to-be dry clothes. Seriously? Were kids so desperate for entertainment that they'd run out in the rain to pull pranks? Oak grumbled, looking over the empty field before him once more and turning to leave.



But before he could do so, a voice called out to him, sounding quite feminine in pitch. "Hey, wait! Don't leave us out here in the rain! You don't know how painful it is to have your flame constantly rained on!"



Excuse him if he was a little confused by what he was hearing but what did the voice mean by that?



Oak glanced back at his porch, brows furrowed as he looked from left to right. Where did that voice come from? There wasn't anything he could see that could've spoken like that but wait, the voice sounded like it came from below him so perhaps it was–



Oak stopped in his tracks, eyes fixated on the sight below him. Three Pokémon stood there: a Charmander, a Bulbasaur, and a Pikachu, not unlike the ones he'd given out hours earlier, all of them stood dripping wet. They gazed back at him and if not for the voice he'd heard earlier, he would've thought they were ordinary wild Pokémon seeking shelter.


Seeking to confirm a hypothesis, he offered the three a smile and said, "Hello there. How may I help you?"



The Charmander grinned and stared at him with their bizarre brown eyes (he'd never seen one with anything but blue eyes before. A birth defect maybe?), the feminine voice coming from their mouth. "Hi, uh… huh, never thought you could understand us… anyway, can you let us in, please? We wanna talk to you about a couple of things."

Well, I was low grade worried that the cast was going to be speaking mon names when talking to humans (ala detective pikachu), but that deosn't seem to be the case here... nice... Also, this Oak seems sorta spacy, reminding me of the anime verse so much... excuse me while I indulge in some nostalgia squeaks...

Seeing the Charmander's behaviour in action, he had little doubt in his mind. They were very likely a human and the other two too if the side-eye glares tossed at the oblivious Charmander was any indication, meaning… "Ah, right. Come in, come in, make yourselves at home."



"Thanks, Professor. Now, come on, you two. You heard the man."



The Pikachu rolled their eyes. "Yeah, yeah, I get it, but if he doesn't believe a single word you say–"



"Oh, don't worry about it. It'll be fine."



Yes, he did not doubt it now. It took all he had to not jump in sheer enthusiasm and overwhelm the trio with questions. And while they did track mud over his once clean and dry floor, he couldn't find it in his heart to care about because, after all, it wasn't every day he had the chance to meet with one, let alone three humans

Interesting cliffhanger. Hinting Oak isn't what he seems. It reminds me of a fic where Oak and the other mon cast "humans" were actually a separate race that wasn't human at all, despite looking almost perfectly mundane...

Well, this was an interesting visit to a fascinating premise. It's interesting to see June knows the base setting (though the others don't seem to know that much), and the others going along for the ride, while blaming June, was an interesting twist. I'm curious to see the cast get deeper into this mess, and see how it plays with game canon as well as see the drop-ins past explored.

Thanks for sharing this tale and giving me a little mystery to play with.
 

K_S

Unrepentent Giovanni and Rocket fan
Chapter 2 catnip review

This is very i.p.
I will pm you once its 100% complete (also it might be late) r.l. being what it is.


Honestly, June had no clue what he was expecting to see. If someone were to ask him what came to his mind when he thought of Professor Oak and his lab, he’d likely say the three Kanto starters, maybe some Sci-fi-esque tech or whatever sciency stuff that were bound to be around.

Well, believe him when he said that none of those fit what he was seeing (except for maybe the starters bit). The interior of the house left much to be desired. Sure it was homey and comfortable and gave off a safe vibe. But it was pretty boring and dry, what with the plain white wallpaper, the tiled floors, and generally how normal it felt.

It is odd to imagine such a color personaloty living in bland land isnt it?

There was an ugly green couch in the middle of the room, along with a coffee table in front of it and a sofa to the side, there was also a flatscreen TV on the wall, some shelves lined up on one side, a potted plant at the corner and–God, it was so plain. Why couldn't there have been at least one futuristic machine sitting in the corner?

Whatever. He wasn't going to complain if it kept his flame from getting wet. Ah, wasn't that an experience he wished he could forget. The little bite-sized prickling that came with each droplet, the constant mind numbing sensation that spread across his whole body, it was like having a trillion cuts all over and then dipping himself in a bath of soy sauce. And it just… just… He shivered. Point was, he would rather not endure something like that again especially when he considered the fact that his tail flame had only gotten soaked a teeny bit. He couldn't imagine how painful it could be if he submerged the whole thing.

A nudge from a paw snapped him out of his trance and he noticed a towel being handed to him by a yellow furry arm. Muttering a "Thanks." to his brother and drying himself, he hopped onto the couch beside him.

June saw the two, likewise drying themselves, and Professor Oak eying them with a curious look. Clearing his throat, he pointed at the man with a claw, bowing and saying, "Thank you for your kind hospitality, Professor. We're sorry for the inconvenience our presence has caused."

Oak smiled, waving a dismissive hand. "Oh, it's no trouble at all. I couldn't just very well leave you three out there, now could I?"

June nodded. "The name's… June and these are my brothers, Ane and Quil. It's nice to officially meet you," he said, then added a few moments later. "Oh and by the way, I'm a guy." His name was rather feminine so a little clarification would help out a long way, in case this Oak was anything like the games.

"It's a pleasure meeting you three, June, Ane, and Quil." He greeted each of them with a nod before returning his full attention to the Charmander. "May I ask what brings you to my lab? You said you have something you want to discuss?"

Well, here comes the moment of truth. "Have you ever entertained the idea of the Multiverse Theory?" A brief spark of recognition appeared in the professor's eye and he nodded, gesturing for June to go on. "Well, hypothetically, what would you say or do if someone got transported here from another universe?” The professor’s brows furrowed and his lips creased into a neutral expression. “And how would you react if said person came from a universe with no Pokémon, and instead their knowledge of the Pokémon world comes from video games, shows, and comics." That garnered a bigger reaction from the old man, his mouth hung loosely, staring at June with a dumbfounded expression.

"Are you…"

"Yes." June nodded, a grin stretching across his face. "We are that someone! And we would love it if you could help us get back home!"

He could almost feel Ane rolling his eyes at his dramatic flair.



Taking a sip from his glass of water, June watched as the expression on Oak's face flowed from contemplating to intrigue. "That is… quite a peculiar situation."

After his little melodramatic statement, Oak had left, saying he needed a moment to process everything. After about a minute or two, he came back, with glasses full of water. Even though June didn't feel particularly parched, he still appreciated it.

Then the man sat down, hands rubbing his chin as he hummed out in thought. "Am I safe to assume that you three aren't trying to pull a silly prank on me?" he said, giving June am intense look that made him feel more than a little discomfort.

He wasn't sure why he was feeling like that — he had nothing to hide, after all — so he merely nodded. "Yeah, we woke up a few hours ago in Route 1 in these bodies and we kinda freaked out a bit–"

"You freaked out and by a lot," Ane unhelpfully provided.

"–I kinda freaked out a bit. " He threw a glare at the Pikachu before returning his attention to the professor. "Then we almost stumbled into Ash Ketchum before we had to run from the rain."

"I see," Professor Oak mumbled, brows furrowing as he played with the end of his coat. "Alright," he said, standing up. "While I don't fully trust you three based on your claims. Frankly, I can't imagine a world without Pokémon. But as a case like yours isn't truly unheard of–"

Wait, what? June blinked. This universe had other isekai-ees before? He… he hadn't expected that. What? "What… what do you mean by that?"

That got Professor Oak to pause, his eyes locking onto the Charmander who flinched slightly at the sudden attention. It took the combined effort of his will and the fact that Professor Oak didn't seem like he was looking directly at him, to not squirm under the man's gaze.

Thankfully though, before it got too uncomfortable, Oak broke away, hands resting on his sides. "While it isn't common, there have been cases where people and Pokémon from other worlds were stranded in ours."

"Really? So we're not just some one-off special?" He tried to hide the disappointment from his tone with a grin which, fortunately, Oak didn't notice.

The professor rubbed his chin. "Well I wouldn't say that," he said. "We never had any cases where the person who crossed over had subsequently turned into Pokémon. I might say you three are the very first recorded case we've had where we actually have an explanation for your Poké-fication!"

Poké-ficarion? Were people turning into Pokemon really that commonplace where there was even a term for it? It would explain why Oak didn't freak out when they met him. He opened his mouth to question that exact topic but was beaten to the punch by his groaning brother.

"Hey, as much as I 'adore' this history lesson. Can we please get to the point?"

Damn it, Ane! He was getting invested in this world's lore! Why did you have to go and ruin everything?

With a hint of redness on his cheeks, Oak rubbed the back of his head, "Right, sorry." Clearing his throat, he faced them with a more serious look. "If I may ask, would you three be fine if I conduct some tests to verify your claims?"

Now it came down to this. This decision, his decision might change how things would look out for them. And all he had to do was say a word. Say the word that would forever change the future… hah, as if this whole bit was anything as dramatic as he was making it out to be. Besides, he had nothing to worry about. They weren't lying so the answer was obvious.

Locking in his answer, he opened his mouth, ready to give in and–

His body froze.

The world around him faded into a realm of dark and white. It was quiet, unnervingly so, he could hear the sound of his blood flowing in his veins, the sound of his scales clinking together as he moved and the sound of his heart beating erratically. Spots of black littered his vision as his eyes darted around. His body refused to obey him. His mind went through several scenarios, working overtime as he tried to come up with something.

What was going on? What was happening? Why couldn't he move? Where was everyone? Why was he in a void devoid of colors? What was going on? What was going on? What was going on?

Help him. Somebody help him. This wasn't fun anymore. He was scared. Frozen. He wanted to leave. Leave leave leave leave leave leave.

Get him out of this hellscape!

Help him!

Help–

The spots around him began to move. Like planets converging on a doomed path to their parent star's corpse.

They mixed. They merged. They reacted. Becoming one. Becoming a single orb that warped the very fabric of reality.

Dark and writhing. It shook him to his very core. He wanted to turn. He wanted to look away. He had to run.

But his body didn't obey, his body never obeyed.

He was stuck, rooted to the void like an added accessory.

And yet, despite his situation. Despite the orb of everlasting consumption. Despite the dread that threatened to consume his realm.

He wasn't afraid.

His mind was numb. His emotions muted. Silenced by an intense drive.

A drive that wanted to satisfy his curiosity.

Reaching an arm forward, he moved.

And the world obeyed.

His face distorted into a frantic grin. He needed to grab it! He needed to have it! That orb! That feeling of familiarity!

Of pain. Of pleasure. Of power. Of change. Of weakness. Of control.

He had to take it.

He had to spread it.

He had to–

Then his realm, his Sol's realm collapsed.

And he was back.

Back in the lab, back to answering the professor's question.

He gasped, ignoring the alerted looks from his brothers and the professor. His eyes darted around, taking in the world one step at a time. Nobody knew.

… nobody knew…

The professor held a concerned look, Ane a worried glance and Quil a look of surprise, they seemed to be saying something but June wasn't in the right state to listen.

What should he do? Should he tell someone? Would they even believe him? His brothers would likely think he was joking and the professor was an unknown. What could he do? What should–

He should hide it. It wasn't like anyone would believe him anyway. Yes, there wasn't anything wrong with not telling them right now. He could tell them later.

So for now, he put the experience to the back of his mind and forced a grin onto his face.

"We'll be fine."



"Age?"

"Fifteen. Turning sixteen in a few months," June said, watching as the professor jotted it down on his clipboard.

Next was Ane. "Fourteen," he said with a dull look in his eyes.

And another down for his report.

Quil stood still, eyes darting to the ground and to his brothers for a moment before saying, "I'm… ten."

After the… incident with that void of dark and white, the professor brought them to his actual lab. Filled with doohickeys and futuristic thingamabobs everywhere! There was an unknown machine there, an unknown machine here. Sure he had to stumble over or around random metal bits and devices on the floor but he was too awestruck by actual flipping solid holograms to even care about how messy Professor Oak's lab was.

June had imagined the test would use one of the machines around them and he was correct! Though when Professor Oak revealed the machine that would help them confirm their claims, it was — oh, how would he put it nicely? — disappointing. Its design was rather simple. And by simple, he meant it was literally just a remote. Sure it had a little screen, with an antenna sticking out, and far too few buttons but that didn't mean it was futuristically cool!

… okay maybe the body-wide beam of yellow light scanning them was pretty cool. But that only let it make it to the 'meh' scale of his coolness meter.

Anyway, where was he? Oh right, the test.

The test itself went by pretty quickly. Oak had the aforementioned laser beam scan them and that was it. When June asked exactly what he was scanning them for, Oak replied with ‘Ultra Residue'. It sounded a lot cooler than what it actually was. See, isekai-ed people, or Fallers as most people called them, had this ‘residue' on their bodies. Ultra Wormholes were rather unstable, they constantly leaked out energy that mixed into the very fabric of whatever universe they appeared in. So whenever something went in, this excess energy would cling onto them and since it had also mixed into the energies of the universe, it could also be used to track and enter wherever said person or object came from.

It was probably a lot more complex than that but that was the jist of it.

Anyway, after Oak did the scan of them, he plopped the remote into a computer and now, all they had to do was wait for the computer to finish its job, uploading and scanning the data. That was the part that was taking a while. June sighed. Figured that even with the Pokémon world being several decades ahead of them in technology, computer loading time still took ages to go through.

So in the meantime, the professor thought it'd be great to do a few body checks of them. 'cause apparently, that was the standard procedure for newly Poké-fied people. He took samples of their blood, scales/fur, and whatever examinations you’d usually find at a clinic.

The results came back to them being the prime example of health. No, he was not exaggerating. Those were the exact words Professor Oak used to describe their health. He would say he was surprised but between the whole turning into Pokémon bit, gaining the ability to speak and read previously unlearned languages, and discovering that there were others like him, having perfect health was nowhere near as shocking when you compared them.

Plus, they even received a snazzy bracelet for all their troubles. Oak said it was supposed to be their 'ID' for Poké-fied people. So, naturally, he picked orange since it blended in nicely with his scales. He mentally snickered to himself. It'd be so fun messing with people who thought he was a wild Pokémon, doubly so when he had nothing to worry about since Poké-fied people couldn't be caught. Orange was also his favorite color so he would've picked it regardless of whether or not he could trick someone with it.

"Full name?"

"June…"

And with that, the rest of the hour went by rather fast and by the end of it, they had their personal information recorded and ready to be used. According to Professor Oak, the FHS, short for Fallers Helpers Society, would need a few months before they could begin the search for their home and it would be ideal to create a sort-of temporary ID for them to do simple things like buying stuff and whatnot.

So they were staying here for a while. Ane didn't take it well and Quil was as silent as ever, still staring at empty space like it had all the answers to the universe. It was a bit unnerving...

He, on the other hand, was fricking ecstatic. Like, they were going to be in the Pokémon world for an unquantifiable amount of time! If he played his cards right, he could potentially find a way to become a trainer and live every child's dream of becoming a Pokémon champion!

… although he didn't know outright whether Poké-fied people could become trainers, he was willing to put his pessimistic thoughts aside to think of a few plans that could convince the professor.

A nagging beeping noise rammed its way into his mind, knocking away his thoughts and snatching him back into reality. He blinked, wincing at the constant ringing in his head. Thankfully, Oak helped alleviate the pain by hopping onto the computer and silencing the notification.

"Alright, let's see what we have…" Oak muttered and not for the first time did June hate how short his new body was. He really wanted to see the whole process, but unless he was willing to jump onto the table, he was not going to get a good look at the data otherwise.

Sighing, he turned to his brothers who each held a bored look on their faces. "Pretty sweet bracelet, eh?" June said, flashing and shaking the accessory.

"I guess..." Ane rolled his eyes. "Ugh, this is gonna take forever! "

"Hey, look on the bright side. We're living every Pokémon fan's dream here! I mean, sure we're not humans but at least we're in a world we know instead of a random fantasy place."

Ane merely groaned and slumped onto the armrest.

Welp, that didn't do anything. And he doubted he needed to cheer up Quil since… he was still staring off into the distance. Just what was he thinking about?

June shook his head, shrugging off the mystery and returning… huh, was it him or did Oak look a bit worried?

Oak sat there, staring at the screen and chewing on his lips. Then as if feeling June's gaze on him, he turned and straightened his face. "There appears to be a problem…"

A problem? June raised a brow. "What's up?"

Oak sighed at the puzzled look on June's face. "Please take a step back." He pressed a few keys on his computer before a flat, translucent, blue screen appeared above their heads, flashing white for a moment before revealing a picture of them.

Hm. He didn't see what the problem was. The pictures looked perfectly fine.

Then another picture took their place, this time depicting a young boy enshrouded in a cloud of blue dust and sparkles. Then another took its place, this time showing a Pokémon with a similar aura of blue dust and sparkles. Then another and another and…

Oh, he saw the problem now.

"We don't have Ultra Residue…" June trailed off, eyes widening as his mouth hung open loosely.

"What? What the hell do you mean we don't have Ultra Resi-what's it!" Ane exclaimed, jumping off the chair and pointing an accusatory paw at the screen. "This has to be a mistake! We–it can't–"

Ane's words faded into obscurity. His mind flooding with questions. What did this mean? Why didn't they have Ultra Residue? Professor Oak said that anything that had passed through Ultra Space would have it; objects, people, Pokémon. So why didn't they? Why didn't they have it? Why were they different? Did it have something to do with that white void he found himself in earlier?

Amidst the sea of questions, one constant question resurfaced and dwarfed them all.

Could they not go home?

A mixed torrent of emotions followed through, seeping into his systems and threatening to tear his mind apart at the constant back-and-forth. Unsettling questions crept into his mind, rocking him to his very core.

Did he want to go home? Of course, he did, what kind of silly question was that? Uncertainty filled his answer.

Did he want to stay? Of course not, that'd be silly no matter how fun it would be. Only a hint of truth covered his answer.

Why did he want to stay? He had no answer.

Why did he want to leave? He had no answer.

His brothers were here, he didn't have much, other than an obligation, to return home to. He had no friends – not anymore – and no other bonds with anyone else.

But was it right of him to rob his brothers of their rightful futures because he wanted to have fun? What about their dad? Would he be distressed at their sudden disappearance? And was he currently drowning in despair?

June swallowed thickly, gagging at the bitter taste in his mouth. He hated those thoughts. He needed to say something. Think of a plan. Force something to come out.

He bit his lip, the slight pain jolting him back and feeding him the confidence he needed. "Professor, is it really that strange for a Faller to not have Ultra Residue? Isn't there some other method that could've brought us here? A Legendary? An unknown deity? Someone failing a magic spell? Please, Oak! We're not lying when we say we're from another world! We're not! I promise you! We're not…"

Please let this work. Please let his pitiful tone worm its way through the professor's old heart. He needed to give them hope. He couldn't let them down. He couldn't. He couldn't.

"I believe you."

June blinked and he faced the professor with a puzzled stare. "Yo-you do?"

Ane kept quiet, stepping back and letting his brother take the lead.

Professor Oak nodded with a careful smile. "Only a heartless monster wouldn't believe you after that display," he said, shrugging. "This case has been getting weirder and weirder the longer I observed it, so it wouldn't be too out of the realm to believe a Legendary could be behind this."

Professor Oak was agreeing with him? The Professor Oak agreed with him?

But… but that didn't… why would he… why? Didn't he say he wouldn't believe them until they had the evidence to back them up? Did their desperation play that much of a role in convincing him?

He didn't understand. He didn't really. But he was willing to let go and accept. They'd already convinced him. Now what? The FHS couldn't help them search for a way home without Ultra Residue, they were pretty much useless now… which meant the only option left was…

His eyes widened and he covered his mouth, muffling the sharp gasp escaping him. "Say, professor. Would it be too crazy to ask if we could look for a way home?" June said before quickly elaborating upon noticing the professor's questioning gaze. "Without the Ultra Residue to trace back, the FHS can't really help us much in sending us home. So I was wondering if we could become trainers and look for the Legendary that sent us here ourselves."

"Trainers? Hm… I'm not so sure–"

“If you're worried about us, we have knowledge that can give us a headstart to any exams you throw at us," June pointed out.

"Hey, what are you–" Quil in all his glory cut off Ane's protest before it could begin, once again showing his presence to the audience.

"Yeah, I can cook and if there’s anything else we need to know, we can just learn it from whatever’s available,” Quil said.

"Yeah! We can–wait… what do you mean you can–" June started, turning to Quil but his brother ignored him to continue talking.

"If you guys can send ten-year-olds out in the wilderness with nothing but a Pokémon and some survival equipment, then I'm sure… no I'm very sure that we can do it too, especially considering that we could potentially talk to other Pokémon.”

The silence was suffocating and he couldn't believe what he was hearing. Was this really Quil? Were all those empty gazes secretly some form of thinking-increasing magic? And the craziest part was that Professor Oak was considering it! Quil had managed to convince him with fewer words than June ever could. What on Earth was going on here?

June took in a breath. He could feel the headache brewing…

Y'know what. Nope, he was not gonna question things anymore. It was obvious he wouldn't be getting any answers anytime soon. So from now on until further notice, he was not gonna question anything until something drastic happened.

With that mental promise set up, he tuned back just in time to hear the professor sigh. "If that is what you three really want then–"

"H-hey! I didn't agree to this!" Ane shouted, fed up with being ignored and interrupted. "Why the hell are we doing this? We–”

And June was going to put a stop to this before Ane ruined everything. He covered the Pikachu's mouth with a claw, glaring at him. "Shut up. This is our best chance at getting home. If you want to go back home, we have to do this. We have to look for the Legendary that sent us here!" he whispered harshly, neglecting to mention that this supposed ‘Legendary’ wasn't even a guarantee either, what with the multiverse theory and all.

The Pikachu glared back, not backing down without a fight.

Sighing, his face softened. "Look, I don't like this either." That was a lie. "But it's either this or stay in this world forever. You have friends and whatnot back home, don't you?" Ane nodded. "And so do I and–hey don't look at me like that. I have friends." Slightly miffed, he turned away with a huff before remembering the audience in front of him. He let out a sheepish chuckle, scratching his cheek. "Uh, you were saying?"

The professor's face creased up with a worried look. "You know, it's fine if you don't want–"

"No, no. We can do this. We can do this! We can… no need to worry about us. We'll be fine."

Happy grin. June. Happy grin. Give him your best smile.

The professor didn't look entirely convinced but he didn't push any further. "If you're sure then… alright. Let's get you three ready for adventuring. Fortunately, we already have most of the paperwork done so this will be quick."

And with that, June did a mental victory dance.



"Remember to call me when you reach Viridian City," Oak said, watching as they leave with a smile.

When he first met the three, he was ecstatic of course. It wasn't everyday he'd met a Poké-fied person, and having three of them in his lab had him barely holding down his enthusiasm. He wanted to ask them so many questions: What was it like? How did it feel? Was their transition smooth? How did it even happen? And so much more.

But that excited curiosity was curbed when he heard their story. It brought him back to reality, reminding him of where he was. After hearing that story, he was skeptical of them. Even after excusing himself and retrieving a pokéball with a Pokémon linked to his mind and checking them for lies, he was still unsure despite their full honesty. A world without Pokémon? Such a thing was inconceivable. The Pokémon Professor could hardly comprehend the idea let alone, believe in a world where humans and animals were the only beings on the planet.

But when he gathered their data with the energy detector, he decided to scan more than necessary, he wasn't sure why he did it but he was glad he had as the results were… concerning.

Ultra Residue. Inconclusive. As seen by the normal picture of the three.

Infinity Energy. Inconclusive. As noted from the lack of distinct energy inside them.

Type Energy. Inconclusive. As observed when he compared them to other Poké-fied people, they held barely any difference from other victims.

It was only the final data he'd received that forced him to a halt.

Aura. Inconclusive.

He couldn't get those words out of his mind the moment he saw them.

He had checked the systems, redoubled his findings, and tried everything he could think of. But it all came back to…

Inconclusive.

Everything, whether living or not, had Aura. The trees, the rocks, Pokémon, people, Poké-fied people, even the very clothes he wore had Aura.

… and yet, those three… those three children had thrown everything he knew, everything he studied about back into his face.

A loud voice had screamed in his mind then. He wanted to understand them, their culture, their world's history. He wanted to learn more. He wanted to learn everything about them!

But he didn't…

He made a lot of mistakes in his time alive and he liked to think he'd learned a thing or two from his mistakes. He wouldn't push another person away because of his impulsive drive to learn, not again. These children needed someone to support them in a world where they weren't supposed to exist. And he was willing to put his researcher side away in order to help someone in need.

Once the three were out of his house, he smiled as he pulled out a pokéball. "Alright, Tutor. Keep an eye on them."

With that command, his Pokémon blinked away.



"And we're off! To see a land unknown~" With a bounce in his steps and the pokéballs jiggling in his belt, the Charmander snapped his claws and raised his arms to the sky. "This is it! We're actual freaking Pokémon trainers! This is so cool! I mean, technically, we still gotta get to Viridian City first to register but this is close enough!" Nothing could ruin his day.

"Ugh, why do we have to be trainers?"

Yup, nothing could ruin his day.

"Hey, since it's gonna take a while before we can register. What kind of Pokémon do you think we should catch in the meantime? I'm thinking of Pidgey. Pidgeot, I've read, can move faster than the speed of sound. Super speed and flight are so cool, and considering that we're operating on anime rules instead of game rules, there's so much we can work with!"

Silence took hold of their surroundings the moment he finished his sentence. Empty. Quiet. Peaceful. Calm. Only the sounds of their feet walking and the grass swaying in the wind could be heard.



God, just what the hell was that white void? Why are we even here for? Ugh, try not to think about the possibility of reincarnation and how that meant my brothers and I died in our sleep…



Aah! Bad thoughts! Baaaad thoughts! Leave him alone! He winced, looking for a distraction before taking note of his brothers' gloomy expressions.

Fine. Guess he shouldn't ignore the situation any further.

"Come on, guys. Stop acting like thaaat~'' He nudged them with a grin on his face. "We're in a world where children can catch and beat up gods so stop acting like what we're doing is impossible~"

"I'll feel better if you yourself would stop acting like that," Ane muttered, not looking his brother in the eye.

"Hm… how about you, Quil? What Pokémon do you wanna catch?" He moved on to the Bulbasaur, not at all discouraged by his brothers' lack of a reaction. "Come on, you were so talkative earlier."

Quil sighed. "Fine. If you want my thoughts then I say we wait till Route 22. If we're going to beat Brock then a Mankey would be good against him."

"Do you think Brock's even gonna be the gym leader? 'cause I'm pretty sure his dad takes his place after Ash fights him."

"Oh… oh huh, you're right."

"I know! And I just realized that!" June groaned. "Now we won't know what his strategy will be. I mean, yeah he's probably gonna still use Rock-types but Brock's like all rock hard so how would his dad be? Stone cold?"

And most damning of all, what should his one-liner be after beating the gym?

Ah, so much to consider!

"Come on! We gotta catch that Pidgey now if we're gonna figure out a strategy!"

"Wait, let's do that after I catch a Rattata," Quil said.

"Huh? Why Rattata? I thought you said you wanted a Mankey?" June raised a brow.

"Yeah, but a Rattata could help in–"

"Hah! Help in what? Being fodder? They're like the most useless Pokémon you could ever catch," June said, dismissively waving a claw. "I mean, there was a reason why Youngster Joey was a meme, y'know. Rattata sucks, period. They're dumb, they're disgusting ugly pests and I don't think I'd ever… Why the hell are you guys scooching away from me? Is there something behind… Oh… oh frick… I see where this is going…"

Did he dare look back?

He turned around and immediately turned back, face paler than a sheet of paper.

Nope nope nope nope. He was getting out of here. He was not going to fight off an entire pack of rats.

But then again, this was the animeverse, maybe if he… "Hey, idiots! Everything I said was one hundred percent true and you know it! Try catching me if you can, suckers!" And to add to his taunting words, he stuck out his tongue.

Ignoring his brothers' shocked gasps, he ran as fast as he could, knowing that his brothers were more than capable of escaping before things went bad.



Things went bad.

No, scratch that. Things went terrible.

It was the worst, the absolute fricking worst. He groaned, nursing a bite mark on his side as he leaned against a stump. Why did he think that was going to go well? Ow. He could barely think over the pain radiating from the bruises and cuts on his body.

He glanced off to his side, Ane sat against a tree. He didn't look as bad as June did but he knew Ane had taken some damage judging by the way he winced and cringed, and Quil lay spread across the grass, exhaustion marring his bruised figure.

He messed up.

"Well, that didn't go as planned." June shrugged, resisting the urge to wince.

"Didn't go as planned?" Ane muttered, his voice holding a dangerous tone that threatened to stab him. "You call pissing off an entire colony of Pokémon a plan?"

"Langua–"

"No! This is the reason why I didn't want to be a trainer! I knew something like this would happen! This is all your fault!" Ane shouted, getting up with his paws balled into fists as he stalked his way to his injured brother. "You made them–"

"Hey, hey calm down. I'm… I'm still hurt…"

"You think I give a damn if you're hurt!" he spat out, raising his fist menacingly.

"Quil… little help here… buddy?"

The Bulbasaur turned his head to give him a deadpan stare. "Long live the king."

Well… he was doomed.

"Wait wait wait, don't–"

Ane brought his fist down.

But it never connected.

Instead, a hand grabbed hold of the paw, stopping its collision with his face. June blinked as Ane let out a startled noise and he stared at the hand with morbid interest. The hand wasn't attached to an arm instead it was coming out of a hole in reality.

"What the fu–"

"Now now now, little Ane. We can't have any of that dirty language here, can we?" A voice giggled from behind June and he jumped, all the aches and pain vanishing from his body as he turned to face the source of the voice.

Staring back at him was a man wearing a hood that covered his entire being. In the void where the person's head should be were two brightly glowing eyes made of gold scanning his very soul.

June glanced back at Ane, watching as the hand let go of Ane and scampered its way to the hooded man.

What the hell was going on?

The hooded person floated down — They were floating! — and accepted the hand's request to rejoin its master. Once reattached, the hooded man tossed their hood aside, and with their being now fully exposed to the sun's rays, June's heart hammered in his chest as he stepped back.

"Who… who are you?" June asked. He needed to know. He needed to know who this was and why… Why did this person have his human face?

With a grin etched onto the being's stolen face, he snapped his fingers and flaming letters appeared above his crimson-glazed hair, blitzing through several letters as he said, "I'm known by many names throughout the Infini-verse. Dark Lord, monster, demon, and other dark and grimy curses but my friends call me Crude. It's a pleasure to meet you, Creator." The flames above his head changed to copy those words, their heat providing warmth that left him uncomfortable.

Creator? What did he mean by that?

"Exactly what it says on the tin, Creator."

Did he just–

'Read your mind? Yes, I did~'


June screamed, clutching his head. "Get out of my head!"

"If you say so," Crude said, switching his attention to the other two, his golden eyes twinkling in mischief. "So you two are Quil and Ane. I've been dying to meet the ones he calls his brothers. What do you think of your sweet little ol' nephew?" He chuckled, swaying to the side and dodging Ane's failed pathetic punch.

"Stay away from us, you stupid impostor!" Ane shouted with disgust marring his face.

"Oh, there's a joke in there that you three wouldn't know for a lo~ong while." His grin reached his eyes as he dodged another punch, making his way over to Quil. "Hey–"

“Stay away from me." Quil glared at the hovering man who merely shrugged and floated away.

"Oof, tough crowd. Am I right?"

June held his head with a shut eye, holding out an arm to prevent the overly aggressive Pikachu from making a mistake. "What are you?" He addressed his flying doppelganger with a bit of difficulty.

"Somebody that you used to know~" He cleared his throat, snapping a top hat into existence and pulling a clipboard out of said hat. "Alright, I've had my fun. Let's get down to business." He gave them a grin that held teeth that fit better if they were on a shark. "'How do you know whether your life is a lie?' Oh wait, that's the wrong question. No need for any existential crises at the moment." He tore the clipboard in half, crumpled it up into a ball, and chucked it back into the top hat which subsequently shattered into a million pieces and bled into the ground.

"Anyway." He snapped a piece of paper into reality. "I'd like you to sign here and here, please."

Please stop… His head hurt from trying to comprehend the last thirty seconds. "What?"

"You three are looking for Pokémon, no? Well, I'm giving you the sweetest package deal of not one, not three, heck not even five, but two, TWO, awesome and rare Pokémon completely free… provided you do the manual work."

"I'd… huh?"

Crude groaned. "Right, I just remembered how slow you can be sometimes." He snapped away the paper, his eyes dimming slightly. "Look, it's simple. You complete some tasks for me and I'll give you two Pokémon as a reward," he said, all the while dodging Ane's futile attempts at hitting him.

"I…" What… what was this thing talking about? Two Pokémon for tasks? The hell was this? Some sort of main quest-type bullcrap? An-and was his doppelganger's hand covered in a wreath of green flames? What the? Did this 'Crude' guy think he'd be desperate enough to get into some kind of deal with a person who literally called himself a demon lord? This had 'Trap!' written all over it.

June growled, swatting away the hand in front of him. "We don't need your help, you… you… faker."

But instead of looking mad or laughing at his rejection, Crude merely gave a dangerous quiet smile that sent chills down his very soul. "Oh… that's just perfect~ Too bad~ that wasn't a real request."

He showed a wider grin that kept widening and widening and–

The image burned into his retina. Its grin threatened to split the being's face in half as the world around them faded into a crimson abyss.

His muscles locked, an invisible force holding him down, compelling him to look, to watch as portals opened up beneath his brothers, sucking them in as he hung in the air, helplessly.

Ane! Quil! He wanted to scream but he couldn't get his body to obey as a single golden eye floated in front of him, mumbling words that hurt to hear as a snap reverberated in the world and his vision turned blank.

"Have fun, Champion." The stolen voice spoke.



Children's laughter filled the calm night. A group of Pokémon sat around a campfire, smiles dancing on their faces as they told stories and cracked jokes, relishing by the warm fire.

The Purrloin, the daughter of the local guards and the eldest of the group stood on her hind legs, forelegs spread wide as she spoke in a low tone. "... it was then the Shinx turned around and saw the monster… a tall creature made entirely of shadows stood there with an orb in hand. The Shinx screamed as the ball connected with his head, dematerializing him and trapping him in to do the monster's every bidding."

Shocked gasps filled the audience as they looked at each other in worry. The adult sitting by, a Luxio, shook her head in amusement, a small grin on her muzzle as she watched the children have their fun. To think she could bear witness to a sight like this after all those years of constantly living in fear.

There were times when she still believed everything was a dream, imagining that she would one day wake up in the cave she'd spent most of her life in as she hid from The Tyrant, hoping so dearly in her heart that they wouldn't end up like her late partner.

She blinked away the tears, shaking her head and banishing those thoughts. She needed to stay in the present. All of her worries and fears wouldn't help her one bit in assuring little Shez's future.

"Hey, Shez's mom!" the Purrloin called out, getting her attention. "Can you tell us the story of how Evie defeated The Tyrant? Shez said he wants to hear it even though he's a big baby."

Shez, her cute little kitten, protested with a small flush on his cheeks. "I'm not a baby, Gild! I can use Spark! Mom says only babies can't do that and I can!"

"You'll always be my baby, Shez." She patted him on the head, ignoring his embarrassed "Mom!" as she ruffled his fur before facing the group. "Are you sure you want that story coming from silly old me? I'm not sure I could do her story justice."

As expected, cries of outrage erupted from the group.

"But you're the best storyteller, Shez's mom!" a Gligar exclaimed.

"Yeah, Miss Luxio. My dad isn't anywhere near as good at telling stories like you can," said the bright Emolga.

As more and more protests piled on, she relented with a sigh, smiling at the group. "If you really wanna hear it then who am I to turn down such lovely faces?" She giggled. "What about you, sweetie? You're sure you can handle it?"

Shez nodded vigorously, having already chosen a seat closest to her.

"Alright, alright," she said. "Gather around, children, and listen to the tale of The Tyrant's End, a true story of our brave hero, Evie..."

Her voice enraptured the kids as the moon cast its light onto the small village below.



Somewhere deep within the forests of Troublewood and an hour away from the nearest village stood a lone building. It was a cosy little thing with a roof of thatch and walls made of the finest wood around, it stood in a small clearing where the moon freely shone its calm brilliance below.

Peering into the small house, a small black fox, a Zorua could be seen sleeping on a straw bed, her ears twitching every so often, blissfully unaware of her surroundings.

Lying her head on a bed bigger than her younger sister, Evie, with her eyes dull and wrinkled from the nightmares haunting her, stared into the ceiling with a glossy look. Stifling back a yawn, her mind was fuzzy and tired yet she couldn't find the strength needed to sleep.

A minute passed, then another and another and another. The moonlight outside was muffled by passing clouds, the light dimming as the brown vixen let out a heavy sigh.

Life was pain.

Her ear flicked, twitching as she moved her head, barely taking in the world around her. She was tired. No – she muffled another yawn – she was exhausted. Yet, no matter how hard she tried, she couldn't fall asleep. Too many nightmares. Too many voices calling out her mistakes, her failures, her–

She caught herself with a rough shake of her head, accidentally biting her tongue in the process, the pain and warmth that spread further stimulated her mind, jolting her even more awake. Groaning, Evie groggily got onto her paws, eyelids heavy as she made her way outside. A nice walk in the woods should help clear her mind.

Taking in a breath of fresh air, the soft breeze of the night brushed against her fur and her mane swayed under the moonlight. There was a fruity scent waning around her, greeting her as she trudged past a particularly overgrown bush and down a path only known to her.

Feeling the grass beneath her paws and the glimmer of light peeking from the leaves above, memories of a past long ago guided her movements and led her down a path. The path held no discernible differences from many others. No particular groves of trees, no particular landmark. Hell, it wasn't even paved, it was simply there, hidden in plain sight.

Only she knew where the path led, a path that brought memories both bitter and sweet. It opened up to a large field where a river split the land in half, pooling into a lake that sparkled in the moonlight. Stars twinkled high above as the gorgeous moon bathed the land in its pale glow. It looked just as beautiful as it did all those years ago.

Something pricked her eyes and she glanced around, fighting back the memories that threatened to spill into her vision. On the other side of the land, she spied a small crater, now overgrown with grass. That was where she'd first failed her attempts at conjuring a Shadow Ball. The resulting explosion was painful but nowhere near as painful as the memory of her mother’s praises. How her praises never failed to cheer Evie up, how her failures never hurt more than a couple minutes, how everything had felt so simple back then.

A cold sensation gripped her paws and she wiped the tears that blurred her vision. She found herself standing ankle-deep in the lake with no memory of when she’d done so. A glint in the lake caught her eyes and she stared, the amber eyes of her reflection stared back, full of contempt and anger at the pitiful and disgraceful being standing before them.

Cracks rippled through the lake as she brought her paw down, breaking the stoic and quiet facade that masked the truth.

It had been months since she'd dealt the decisive blow against him. It… was nothing short of euphoric. The chains that had shackled her shattered, bringing forth a new wave of peace and joy into her broken state. Everyone was happy.

Perry, Rower, the citizens of Troublewood, her sister… they were overjoyed when she delivered the news. A new era had arrived, one no longer bound by fear and pain.

Yet, despite their happy faces, despite how thankful they were, despite the love and praise they threw at her, she didn't feel anything. In the following weeks, she helped them adjust, helped them learn, helped everyone who needed her. Everyday, she went through the motions with a false smile on her face, each action feeling heavier than the last, the nightmares that lingered definitely didn't help with that regard. Sometimes she didn't feel like leaving her bed, sometimes she didn't feel like moving, sometimes she didn't feel like doing anything.

Days had passed by like a blur and she would often find herself staring into the sky, hours having gone by without her realising. Why did she feel so numb? That was a question that had plagued her for the two months of peace that came.

And it was only during a calm night, sitting by a campfire when she found the answer.

She was bored.

The reason why everything felt repetitive, why it was so dull, was because she was bored. She was bored of the peace. The peace that she and many other had fought over a decade for.

She was bored with it.

Blood, sweat and tears. Countless of lives and deaths. The neverending pressures and pain of everyone, of everything bearing down on her shoulders. She had missed it.

She'd missed the pain that followed her everywhere.

At first, Evie was disgusted at herself, at the thought that had come. She wanted everyone to suffer once more just because she was bored! Why couldn't she have just been satisfied with the peace and be happy with it? Why couldn't she just be happy? Why?

Why did she have to be such a freak?

Water splashed all over her figure but she didn't care enough to notice. Her eyes narrowed and she glared, baring her fangs at the creature in the lake.

Why couldn't she have just been happy with the results? Why was she so fucking selfish? She should be happy! She should be! So why wasn't she? Why was she hiding herself from everyone else? Why did she have to be such a greedy and disgusting twat?

Why?

Why did everyone continue to look up to her as if she was perfect? Why did they love her so much? Why did everyone have to look so happy when they saw her?

Why couldn't they see the weak fool she really was?

She didn't deserve it. She didn't deserve any of it. Not when she couldn't–not when she had failed him.

Why couldn't she have been strong enough to protect the ones she loved? Why was she only strong enough after she’d failed? Why was she so useless?

Tears trickled down her cheeks, rippling the lake as they fell.

Nobody knew the pain and anguish she felt all those years ago. They wouldn't understand. None of them would. Not even her sister.

And in the end, none of it mattered, not anymore. She was strong now. Stronger than anything in this forest. Not even the ancient dragons that hid here could dare hope to challenge her now. She would bear the pain like she always did.

All she needed was for her sister to be happy. Her sister’s happiness was everything to her. All her problems didn't matter as long as her sister was fine and happy.

Cleaning her sorry self off, she cast one final glance over the land, disgust muddying her expression. What used to be a beautiful place was now tainted by her pathetic weakness. Tch, she was such a disgrace.

She turned to leave, ready to try and get some rest before the day began and–

A flicker of light.

There, far off in the distance, she could see yellow light, dancing, wavering. She blinked, rubbing her eyes with a paw to make sure she wasn't seeing things. No, it was still there. What was that? A flame? Was someone out there? That couldn't be right. There shouldn't be anyone living there, not at the moment, she had requested it as such. Plus, she couldn't make out any smoke so it wasn't from any open fires.

A Ghost-type maybe? Again, not likely, their flames were usually purple, blue or pink, never the standard flame. So it couldn't be that.

But then what could it–

Her blood ran cold.

A human.

It could be a human.

She shook her head. No, that couldn't be right. None of them would ever dare venture into Troublewood when he showed up. He–The Tyrant had succeeded at blocking any humans from entering the forest, even the elites and aces stood zero chances against him. They wouldn't come in. They wouldn't…

But what if they did? What if they knew The Tyrant had died and were hoping to expand their hold onto the forest? Her heart stammered a beat and she squished the ugly thoughts that breached her mind, the ones that felt pleasure at the thought of them knowing, the actions that would be taken when they reported their fin
dings, the fights that would ensue, the–No, stop it!

She would never want something like that! She’d never forgive herself if she let innocent Pokémon suffer because of her wants, and her sister…

Okay, she made her decision. Whatever that light was, she would discover the source of it. If it was what she thought it was then she’d take proper actions against them and if needed, kill them. Hopefully, it would never come to that but she wouldn't freeze up if she had to.

“Alright, head in, check it out and see if it needs immediate attention. If not, then scold whoever the fuck is out so late,” she muttered under her breath, her legs tensing up before she cleared the field in the blink of an eye. She glanced around, zipping from tree to tree as she honed in on the brightening light. The woods grew thicker the deeper she went, bushes and overgrown roots obscured the land, forcing her to slow down lest she had to waste more energy healing herself.

Thankfully, there were a couple less cluttered paths available and she stalked them down, leaping over anything she couldn't walk over until finally she rounded a line of oran berry trees and reached the light where it was the brightest. It came from a small field, a little opening with nothing too special.

Her eyes scanned the opening and immediately, she found the source of the light. The sight made her heart leapt to her throat and she found it hard to breathe.

There was a Charmander on the ground, lying dead to the world with their soft breathing being the only indication of life. She couldn't believe her eyes. A Charmander. Here? That made it all the more credible that a human was nearby! But how? How could a human have come here? That shouldn't be possible. Perry had said they were still in an ongoing war. So they couldn't be. They couldn't!

Then perhaps they were abandoned? She almost scoffed at the thought. Charmanders were incredibly popular and sought out back when… She shook her head. It just wasn't possible.

But then how could a Charmander be here if not for a human setting camp nearby? She looked around, eyes scrutinizing every inch of the place for… nothing she could see, no tracks, no footprints, not even a whiff of a human’s salty odour. However, she didn't dare let her guard down. Just because she couldn't see them didn't erase the possibility of a human hiding somewhere.

Her ears flicked forward and her eyes lingered on the yellow flame at the tip of the Fire-type’s tail. Casting one final glance at her surroundings, she crept forward, muscles tensed, ready to bolt or fight if what she was about to do was incredibly stupid.

As she got closer and closer, a new feeling crawled into her range, pressing against her with its weight. A shiver ran down her spine and she froze, eyes locked onto the Charmander that felt like the void.



Pain pounded his head the moment he returned to consciousness. He clutched his head with a claw, groaning as prior memories flashed through his mind. Opening his eyes, he stood up, looked around, and promptly screamed like a little girl.

June scrambled back, arms, legs and tail flailing. His eyes wide, full of panic as his back pressed against the bark of a nearby tree, the sensation of the wood sticking was nothing compared to the fricking heart attack assaulting him. Crap crap craap! “Don't eat me!” he squeaked out, arms covering his face for the inevitable attack. “My flesh is squishy and tainted! It wouldn't be–be…”

He heard laughing. No bites, teeth or claws, just…

Laughter? He lowered his arms, seeing the Pokémon that had previously loomed over him, chuckling, giggling like a little schoolgirl after being told a joke from her crush. Momentarily dumbfounded, he stared in silence at how human it–she? looked.

The Pokémon before him was massive, easily over twice his size and probably near the height of his human self. She resembled a fox, albeit a massive one and she had a light cream mane that was splayed over and yet didn't look as messy as it should look. Her mane trailed down her neck, reaching her withers and meshing well with the fur around her neck, much like an Eevee’s. Though, unlike an Eevee, there was an odd gash of red fur that streaked down from top to bottom and was the same shade as blood.

Huh, was she one of the Pokémon Crude said he was going to catch? If so, then she definitely ticked all the boxes of an interesting mon for an isekai.

Snapping himself out of his stupor, June jumped onto his feet, his cheeks flaring red as he pointed at the Pokémon. “He-hey, stop laughing at me!” he shouted, yet much to his dismay it only made the vixen laugh harder.

“S-sorry,” the fox said between giggles, her fluffy tail swaying slowly behind her. “I just wasn't expecting a reaction like that.” She chuckled, muffling her muzzle with a paw. “Heh, Arceus, I needed that.”

“We-well,” he began, trying desperately to remove the flush on his face, “it isn't like my panic wasn't justified! Any normal person would react like that when they see a giant hungry fox standing over them.”

She raised a brow at him before shaking her head, a toothy grin on her face. “Well, luckily for you, practically no Pokémon can eat each other no matter how hard they try.”

June blinked. “Really?”

She nodded.

How the hell did that work?

Questions for later. He shook his head. He needed to figure out where he was first. With a grin, he struck a pose. “The name’s June and it rhymes with dune! Nice to meet you, lady...”

“Evie, though I’d ditch the lady part. I'm sure I'm not that much older than you are,” she said with a cheery tone that sounded… odd to his ears.

“So mind if I ask where we are or what you ar–”

“Troublewood. You're in Troublewood,” she said, her eyes narrowing the slightest bit, “and I'm an Eevee.”

“An Eevee?” he repeated with a dry look. “You don't look like one.”

“I know what I am, June.” His mind went alert at the danger laced in her tone. The smile on her face thinned and her eyes narrowed in a subtle glare.

“Right,” he said the word in the most sarcastic tone he could make, making a show to roll his eyes. “Evie the ‘Eevee’. Way to hit the nose with that name,” he muttered, missing the way her teeth bared into a growl as he clapped his claws. “Since we're trading secrets! Why don't I share some of mine with ya, Eves?”

“Don't call me that.” She snarled.

Undeterred, he raised a claw. “How would you react if I told ya that I'm actually a human who got turned into a Pokémon and sent to another universe?”

The smile on her face was fully gone now. Hm, that wasn't the reaction he was fishing for. Whatever, too late to back out now.

“Because I actually am a human that got–blah blah blah and not only that but I also, for some dumb reason, have a doppelganger that has godly powers and am now forced into being his–their–my? pawn for some unknown task!” He finished up with a claw pointed to the sky, his legs spread as he struck a pose.

She muttered something he could barely make out, sounding like she was talking about… mind control? The hell? What did that have to do with–

There was a sudden burst of wind blowing against him, dust and grass flying and when he blinked, his vision was obstructed by a round blue object. He took a step back but the orb only pushed itself forward and into his mouth.

“Here, eat this,” Evie said, having closed the distance in the blink of an eye and currently shoving said round object into his mouth. “It's not much but it'll help that wound of yours heal up better.”

His wound? Oh right, he had forgotten about that. He glanced down, it was mostly healed up and was barely even noticeable, how good was her eyesight if she could spot it? Hell, he could barely see it.

And like with anything else that was given to him, June took the fruit with a silent nod, not quite sure how to respond and wishing his voice would come back before awkwardness took hold of their silence. He bit into the oran berry, the juices of the fruit invigorating his mind and body despite its lacklustre taste.

Evie wiped something off her muzzle, probably having already eaten her own berry as she mumbled about the lack of chesto berries nearby. She turned to him, the previous cheer in her tone all but vanished when she said, “Alright, follow me.”

Swallowing the fruit with an audible gulp, June raised a scaly brow. “Follow you? To where?”

“My home,” she answered. “After what happened the last time one of your kind arrived here, not many Pokémon are keen on seeing another Fire-type so soon.”

There was something quite ominous with the way she said it but he didn't dwell on it for too long. With a cheeky grin and an exaggerated gasp, he said, “Oh, I wouldn't worry about that, Eves.” He ignored her growl. “I'm sure I'll grow on them just like I've grown on you. I mean, there must be some sort of isekai charm on me if I'm already being invited by a girl to her home.”

She gave him a blank stare, turned around and promptly began walking away.

“Hey, wait! I haven't started my two hundred questions in this new world yet! Don't leave!”
 
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