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Chapter 24- Discipline Part 1: Lavender

Kiba Makuro

Junior Trainer
Pronouns
He/Him, They/Them
Originally Posted February 29th, 2024 (Leap Day!)
Updated March 4th, 2024
Ported October 15th, 2024

Chapter Summary
Team Sharp Claw has a soft morning, trying to move forward. But what if a real reason to move forward sets foot at their door? How will they handle the situation, and their new feelings?

Linus Treecko's POV​


In the dim light of the Leagues bedroom hallway, Chief McBone stood before us, a warm look across her muzzle.

I wiped the sleep from my eyes as Nevada and Glade shuffled up beside me. “You'd like ta see us?” I asked, my voice low.

The Stoutland took a few steps back before she nodded. “Yes Linus, I just remembered something fun and exciting we could do for breakfast.”

“Fun and exciting?” Glade murmured.

“Cooking something new could make you feel better.”

“It won't hurt,” Nevada said with a tired laugh.

We needed this. This was my, no, our first morning without Jin after that so-called Knight from the Committee took him away.

I don't know what the pains of first love were until recently. Especially once that love was lost. And Jin loved me too. Or at the least, liked me.

But we were too cautious. And didn't train him. I won't make that mistake again, watching him slip away.

Nevada, Glade, and I followed Chief McBone down to the first floor of the League and all the way into the kitchen.

The Stoutland raised a paw and gestured at the countertops before she spoke. “I know this is unconventional, but I want to try a recipe I learned from someone.”

“Noodles?” I asked, and peered further at the low countertop.

Mushrooms, leek stalks, eggs, and tofu had been spread out into various bowls, while an enormous pot filled with water sat on the stove. By the stovetop sat row after row of long thin strands of whitish-yellow dough.

“Yes,” Chief McBone explained. “We are having shoyu ramen this morning.”

“Shoe you?” I asked, my brow quirked.

“Raw men?” Nevada blinked.

“Shoyu ramen,” the Stoutland repeated slowly. “The first word means that it's based on soy broth, and the second refers to these thinly cut noodles.”

I nodded. “Sounds nice.” I've never heard of anythin’ like this.

Glade tilted her head. “Is this even a breakfast food?”

Chief McBone chuckled a little. “Well, it could be anything technically.”

Nevada sharpened their claws, then picked up one of the ingredients. “So what are we doing?”

“Cutting the mushrooms, leeks, tofu, berries and cooking the eggs. I prepared the noodles for the ramen over the past few days along with the broth.”

“What broth?” I asked as I stared into the pot of seemingly clear water.

“It's a berry, soy and vegetable broth, we are going to add it to the water and all the other ingredients.”

We separated each group of food and got to work.

The Charmander and Totodile gazed into the pot.

“It has all those ingredients, yet is still light colored?” Glade asked.

Nevada nodded. “Cooking sure is complicated.”

Chief McBone chuckled, “I thought the same when I learned this recipe.”

Oh, interesting! “Who taught you?” I asked.

“It doesn't sound Bristbergian. Or from all the way in Twin Star,” the Totodile added.

The Charmander's tail flame flickered in what I assumed was thought. “Coordinator Cooper is from the Twin Star Continent right?”

“Well yes,” the Stoutland watched over the warming pot of broth. “I didn’t learn it from him though. I learned this recipe from Kuroshi.”

Kuroshi? Wait! I gasped and nearly dropped the mushrooms. “Kuroshi… I recognize that name, he was-”

“A-” Chief McBone struggled to find her words as she met my gaze. “A former member of Team Vanguard. Kuroshi was a strange rocky but devoted Arcanine.” She glanced over at Glade and Nevada with a sigh.

“A rocky Arcanine?” I asked. “Kinda how like Jin's a ghostly Zorua?”

“Yes, I believe they could have been familiar with one another, but that's talk for another time.”

He must have been Hisuian too? She knows more but we're not ready. Well I'm not ready. My tails drooped as I finished slicing some of the leeks. “I guess.”

“I want you three to try and keep your heads up,” the Stoutland said then placed a paw on the table. “I know it’s been difficult.”

I took in a deep breath as she continued.

“Not having someone you thought was a future teammate anymore is something that this League is familiar with. But I believe things are different this time.”

“I hope yur right,” I said as I picked back up the mushrooms.

Chief McBone added some Rawst and Pecha Berry chunks into the broth. “I hope I am too, now let's continue.”

Nevada boiled a few of the flying-type eggs, while Glade and I cut up the other ingredients.

There were some more bunches of berries we chopped up, and some water-type and normal-type eggs that we prepared.

I scrambled a few eggs while the Totodile beside me diced the last of the fruit, tofu, mushrooms, and leeks.

As I finished the tofu, the Stoutland slowly dropped the noodles into the broth.

With all the ingredients stirring deep inside the pot, the broth slowly changed hues from light yellow to a darker cream as the mushrooms, eggs, tofu, and leeks blended in their nutrients and flavor. The heat of the stovetop boiled the ramen, it solidified and absorbed the new ingredients into its composition. And now it took a stable form. I loved watching things cook up like this. Made ma feel like I was at home.

Chief McBone dashed a bit of pepper, salt, and some seasoned salt made from Cheri, and Lum Berries. She gestured to the pot and I poured her a small serving.

It's still piping hot though?

A chill ran through the room as the Stoutland made her fangs frozen with ice and took a couple of laps from the bowl.

Using Ice Fang like that? Genius.

With a satisfied nod Chief McBone got back down on the floor. “Breakfast is ready!” she called. The Stoutland turned to me and the team. “Now let's set up the table.”

“Got it.” I reached down to the other cabinet and pulled out a large collection of bowls.

Glade pulled out the cart, while Nevada poured in a starting portion of the food. We wheeled it down to the ‘U’ table and set out the first couple when everyone made their way down stairs.

Coordinator Cooper, Diamond, Chad, Rio, River, Slowbro, Mienfoo, Anabel, and Bernard all filled in the seats of the ‘U’. “We are having shoyu ramen for breakfast today!” Chief McBone explained. I, Glade, and Nevada stood by the cart while everyone else ate for about thirty minutes. Then we settled down and had some of the shoyu ramen for ourselves.

Breakfast was simple and quiet. Perhaps out of respect, or maybe reverence? Everyone got what they wanted and left with little to no fanfare.

We excused ourselves back to our room and got ready for the day. Once we had our scarves and badges we came back downstairs. Then we cleaned up the kitchen.

As Glade, Nevada and I put away the dishes and leftover shoyu ramen the doorbell rang. The chime echoed through the entirety of the League.

My blood froze in my heart.

It can’t be!?

The words, in a whisper, barely left my mouth as I stood stark still.“C-chief McBone?”

The Stoutland cleared her throat as her eyes narrowed. “Rio and River!” she almost yelled. “Bring Diamond and Chad too!”

Wait no Morág, Devontay or the others? Ah wait, Team Whitelight left while we're cleaning yesterday.

Coordinator Cooper shuffled out of the living room. I stumbled away from the Granbull and his piercing black eyes.

He softened his expression and spoke. “Team Sharp Claw please wait a moment while we figure out who it is.”

“Understood,” we replied.

“Don't follow us to the front door yet.” Chief McBone took a couple of steps away. She perked her ears up, as to hear any potential sound the outsider made, even from all the way out here.

Coordinator Cooper lowered his gaze towards Glade’s, Nevada's, and my level. “We'll let Anabel, and Bernard vet them as usual in the watchtowers.”

Why does he think I don't know that? Anger spiked through my throat. “I said I got it,” I growled.

“Linus,” the Stoutland spoke softly. “Please remember to behave appropriately.”

I clenched my fists and stared at the wall.

I can't. I don't know what I'll do if he's there. And what to do about whoever is there with him.I'm not strong enough.

A warm claw touched my shoulder and I flinched. My watering, trembling eyes met with Nevada's. That’s right, the eyes of someone whose siblings were put in a tough bind by Wicked Blow and forced to be twisted. Those bright blue beacons of hope belonged to someone who needed me. And I needed them.

The Charmander nodded.

“I'm here too Linus.” Glade gently patted my back.

The Totodile's red eyes gleamed. Someone else with family, ruined entirely by Wicked Blow.

“Thanks guys.”

She lifted her claw as the Herdiers, Wartortle, and Pikachu hurried down the stairs.

The four Pokémon walked over to the front door and talked in hushed whispers. Rio and River walked back in and sighed.

“River and I, as former members of Team Vanguard, now Paradise Ranchers still need to remain on the low,” Rio explained.

River followed right beside her. “It's the Committee and they don't need to know about us being here at the League.”

Chief McBone returned, and her ears lowered as she caught my eye. “Nevada, Glade, Linus, it seems you all are required.”

“Understood.”

The path to the sealed front door felt massive. Every step felt like an eternity had passed.

Anxiety crept through my body as the silence rolled through the air. Our only answer, to who was out there, was locked firm beyond our defenses. But one press of a triangular League badge, and it was free.

With a rolling thud the door opened. Like before the chilling burst of air briefly assaulted my senses, but I didn't look away.

The Pokémon before us, wasn't Head Tiger, not the so-called Head Knight, and they weren't Jin.

An oddly purple-grey Sneasel, with dark purple curved claws and golden gems, one riddled with tiny scars and bandages all across their body stood before us. They trembled and took in a deep breath once they noticed me.

Where is Jin?

The air felt tense as I, Glade, Nevada, and everyone else glanced over them, along the shade of the awning.

Wait, that's not just any odd Sneasel, that's Jin's friend from Hisui! I remembered he said her name was Toko.

Where is he?

Before I even had a chance to speak, the air beside the purple Sneasel morphed into a lilac colored visage. It grew and grew until a Pokémon was finally visible, a Mismagius.

But something was off. Along their spectral body, Mismagius sported an array of dark grey splotches, just like Tiger and Knight before them. A black, purple, and red cape, draped along their shoulders, just like them too. “I am Lady Spellbound, a Head of the Committee,” her haunting voice crept out. “And the one beside me is Toko.”

“Where’s Jin!?” I asked, my voice shaky and raw.

Spellbound laughed a low and drawn out laugh as she narrowed her eyes. “He's unnecessary, just like this one here.” She pushed, no, she shoved, Toko forward with one of her tendrils.

The Sneasel nearly crashed onto the ground but I shot forward and held her upright. My vision grew red as I locked eyes with the Mismagius, grass-type mana pooling into my stomach. “What did you say?”

“Linus!” Glade and Nevada held onto me.

With another chortle, Spellbound pointed at Toko. “Why don't you tell them Toko?”

I let go of the Sneasel and Toko staggered upright, a weak smile forming on her muzzle. “This… I believe in Jin,” her surprisingly firm and peppy voice called.

“What?” I questioned, my eyes widened.

The Sneasel held a claw over her scarred shoulder and took in a deep breath. “Jin is performing in an examination,” she explained with strained vigor. “This is because he interacted and learned a surplus of information from you Pokemon.”

Her ear feather twitched as the Mismagius behind her laughed once again. I glared daggers at Spellbound but didn't speak as a paw, one from Chief McBone gently held me.

“Excuse me. I do not see what's so funny, Lady Spellbound,” The Stoutland spoke carefully. That Legend Roche elocution, at work I see.

The Mismagius pulled on her black, purple, and red cape, and folded her arms behind her back. “Jin and Toko are useless to our Eternal Vision. They can't assist in controlling the most sacred artifacts of all.”

Most sacred? I took in a shuddered breath. Which mana artifacts is she talking about? Is it about them being turned into Ether Gems? They know which Pokemon can’t after their tests?

Coordinator Cooper stepped in front of me and Toko. “And?”

“That is all I have for you. Keep up with the work assigned to your League, nothing more, nothing less.”

I held onto my arms and stared at the ground below the Mismagius, my head clouded in rage. We can't make our move yet, not yet !

“Of course Lady Spellbound,” the Granbull responded, his words calm and collected. “We will not falter.”

“I’m glad you know your place. Farewell, League.” Spellbound drifted further and further away, her physical form vanished more with every moment.

Then she was finally gone.

Coordinator Cooper cleared his throat as we all stood amidst the growing snow flurries and chilly air. “Let's go inside.”

Chief McBone took her paws of my body and stared at the gates of the League beyond the cobblestone courtyard and watch towers. Her gaze remained set on the path Spellbound took before she turned.

Glade, Nevada, and I headed back in the League, with Toko right behind us.

The Stoutland and Granbull moved from their positions and sealed back the League front door, all the while I held on to my shaking hands. My neck felt awfully cold, so I pulled my scarf off over my head and tied it above my shoulders.

“Let's go to the office.” Chief McBone ordered, her tail low.

Toko suddenly stood still and didn't move a muscle.

I let go of my hands and wordlessly gazed at her.

The Sneasel’s rich dark lavender tail feathers, and ears curled down toward her body, her limbs drawn close to her chest and midsection.“Praytell, am I in trouble?”

Coordinator Cooper held his paw out to Toko and knelt by her side. “No, we are going to the office for quite the opposite.”

“A reward?”

“Yes darling,” the Stoutland ahead answered in a gentle tone. “You'll be given an opportunity you'd never imagine.”

We made our way up the stairs, all the way to the third floor and to the office. Coordinator Cooper opened the door for us, and I finally entered the room where it all began.

The two desks filled with stacks of papers and folders all sat in the center of the room. While chairs, and stools of varying sizes lined the walls, by the calendars, corkboard, and whiteboards.

“You can have a seat anywhere you'd like or just stand,” Chief McBone said as she looked through the drawers of her low rise desk.

Toko plopped down on the floor and stretched her legs before she sat down in a crossed leg position.

I grabbed one of the stools and slid it right beside the Sneasel while everyone else settled in a chair or stool around us.

The Stoutland at the desk pulled out our League's three-toned bandana and a small bronze badge in her maw before she dropped them on her desk. “Welcome to the Bristberg Mana Research League.”

“Thank you for having me.” The Sneasel prostrated herself. “What tasks shall I, this honorable servant of the almighty Sinnoh perform?”

The what? That ain’t Mew, Arceus or the others! Nevada sparked their tail flame once I glanced their way while Glade didn't flinch one bit.

“You won't have to perform any tests, at least not right now,” Chief McBone chuckled.

Toko's eyes widened. “I will not? This servant begs your pardon?”

Coordinator Cooper held out a piece of paper. “Normally you'd have to do the entrance exam, but understanding your circumstances we shall take you in regardless.”

I squinted my eyes at the page, it was our team registration file. With two new names below Glade's, Nevada's, and mine.

Toko leaned back and stared at me and the team. “I am joining these three?”

“Yes, you can join their Rescue Team, it's called Team Sharp Claw,” the Stoutland replied, her tail slowly swishing side to side.

It's now or never.

I stood up and held my silver rank badge toward the Sneasel.

“What is this?”

“A promise,” Glade, Nevada and I said together.

“The one I couldn't keep to Jin.” I clenched my badge tighter.

The Charmander and Totodile also held their badges up. “We promise to protect you and teach you all about this world. It's the least we could do.”

“What shall I give in return?” Toko staggered upright.

“Please work with us to end the Disruption, by any means necessary.”

“Understood.” The Sneasel fastened the scarf around her right bicep, and put the bronze badge on it. “I Toko, servant of the Almighty Sinnoh, shall join Team Sharp Claw!”

Even though we just got another teammate, my heart felt empty.

Toko was too much like him. The oddly purple-Sneasel was once a ward of the Committee, spoke in a formal manner, and didn't know much about the land. She knew the majority of our species because Jin told her, but not ones like Diamond, a Wartortle or the Herdier twins.

But Toko was also different. This Sneasel was a Sentinel, not a Keeper. But still, I felt an odd connection to her. Almost like the one I had when I first saw Glade and Nevada five years ago. But that was before we learned the three of us were something special. Fangs of the Fallen. Was there room for a fourth so soon? Or maybe Toko's unique poison-fighting elemental typing was just alluring. She was a Sneasel after all, not a Croagunk.

Back before the Disruption truly started. I wanted to forget about why I was here. Why I was here at the League.

Six years ago, I couldn't handle loss and went to the Black Clover Mercenaries. When I left, no, ran away from home after Scabbard and Maxwell were taken from my family by Wicked Blow.

And a year later, when I finally joined the League something happened to Hatchet and Kobi, involving our Artibax and Scovillian cousins.

But this stuff with the Committee was something more sinister. I don't understand how Toko was fine after all she's been through! I wanted Jin instead.

Toko prattled on and on about the Almighty Sinnoh, a Pokémon from Hisui. She came to the League beaten and bruised, which was a bigger priority.

Chief McBone took the Sneasel to the medbay to see the extent of her injuries and help patch her up. Unlike last time both CJ and Astesia weren't there, still out on reconnaissance.

Glade, Nevada, and I waited outside as they checked things over. The damn Committee just openly flaunted that they abused their so-called ‘wards’ so brazenly. Even if Toko was a fighter she would have normally healed.

I shuddered at the idea of whatever torture Jin went through.

The door slowly creaked open and a familiar Granbull poked his head out. “You can come in now.”

“We cleared her to go out on Mystery Dungeons and train.” Chief McBone pushed away some medical files.

Coordinator Cooper opened the door of the medbay for him and the Stoutland before he turned to me. “Make sure you clean up before you all leave.”

“Understood,” I replied with a curt nod. And then the two of them left us alone.

“Let us head out as soon as possible!” the Sneasel said in between bites of Oran and Sitrus Berries.

“Why?” Glade and Nevada asked.

Toko flexed her arms as she took out the fruit slices. “This servant wishes to climb the tallest mountains behind the League!”

“What?!” I gasped.

“You told me to help end the Disruption, which means getting stronger as quickly as possible!”

“But Toko those are beyond expert level climbs, and you just got here,” the Charmander sighed.

“That shall not stop me!”

“Why can't ya understand that we can't go?” I groaned.

“We? I was isolated from the outside world, I desire to explore everything I can and test my limits!”

Nevada rubbed the back of their head.“We could start small instead? Like training in the practice field?”

“Shall I be able to reach my goals there?”

The Totodile across from the two rolled her shoulders. “Toko, you're bandaged up and this energetic?”

“Yes?”

“As much as I want to, I can't keep up.”

“You three are unwilling?”

“Yeah Toko, we can't just go wherever we want, we are assigned suitable missions from Coordinator Cooper and Chief McBone.”

The Sneasel glanced at us and her ear feather drooped. “This servant understands, I shall relax and continue eating.”

Oh I got an idea! I hopped out of my stool and opened the medbay door. “Why don't we go to the kitchen? We still got some breakfast, ya can have some real food.”

“Real food? That sounds splendid!”

We took Toko to the ‘U’ and pulled out a fresh bowl for her.

“Ah shoyu ramen.” Toko grinned at the display. “Now this is something I have not had in a while.”

“We helped Chief McBone make it,” Glade chuckled.

The purple-Sneasel sat down and sniffed at the broth of ramen before she slightly recoiled.

“Thank you for the meal,” she said before she went through the ingredients. In the end she pulled out all the pieces of water, flying, and normal-type eggs.

The Totodile beside me took in a breath and looked away while I rubbed my temples. “Ya don't like eggs, Toko?” I asked as I sat down.

Toko bit off a large strand of noodles and swallowed it. “This is what I used to do in Hisui, as a tenant of faith towards the almighty Sinnoh. Take none from life if I could avoid it.”

“Well, these eggs were never alive.” The Charmander beside her gestured with their claws.

“I shall not falter even at this moment.”

“It's food! That doesn't even make any sense!” Glade slammed her claws on the table.

“And what's with this almighty Sinnoh you keep talking about?” Nevada grumbled.

Toko folded her ears as the Charmander and Totodile stared her down. “Am I offensive with my display of faith? I already had to hide it from the Committee and I thought I would be free to practice my discipline.”

Can't believe ya'd worship anyone other than Mew, Arceus or Xerneas but whatever. I shook my head. “I got it, let's make sure we ain't puttin’ any eggs in your food, and ya get extra berries and the like to compensate.”

“Thank you. That will be adequate.”

As the Sneasel finished her breakfast, Coordinator Cooper approached us.

“Good morning Team Sharp Claw,” the Granbull called.

I slowly turned to him and tilted my head.

He had an odd black band, or rather a collar or headband of some sorts, one with a silver plate attached to it. “I think it's time to try out the testing swords again.”

“The black swords?” Nevada's jaw dropped.

Glade jumped out of her seat. “The thing that proves it to everyone else that we're special, that we're Fangs of the Fallen!”

“Ah yeah!” I cheered. “Let's go!”

“What shall I do?” Toko asked as she also got up.

Coordinator Cooper glanced over the purple Sneasel and nodded. “As a Sentinel it wouldn't hurt if you tried as well, we and our allies in black always need more data.”

“Understood!”
 
Chapter 24- Discipline Part 2: Limestone

Kiba Makuro

Junior Trainer
Pronouns
He/Him, They/Them
Originally Posted March 14th, 2024
Ported October 15th, 2024

Chapter Summary
Linus is struggling to understand Team Sharp Claw's new position and new addition. With new information and a chance to show off their skills how will Team Sharp Claw press onward?

Still Linus Treecko's POV


We headed through the halls, down to the living room. Snow filled the view of the land beyond our sliding glass doors. Ivory piles and mounds littered the ground and flakes and flurries clouded the sky in a temperate icy seascape, pockets of the morning blue far in between.

It was chilly as usual in this early Winter outside. The tempered air only slightly warmed past the patio and all the way to the practice field.

There sat a large brown, red, and yellow object, kinda like an elongated Substitute Doll, and the fabled black sword. I walked closer toward the Substitute and saw a small twine or thick string of some kind connected to it and it led to an odd grey and black box.

The box had a few buttons and knobs on both the face and the head of it, while the face had something like the screen of a Connection Orb or something.

More importantly the black testing sword sat in the crate Morág had previously brought to us, and a long string was embedded in the handle of the blade, all the way to the machine.

“What's all this?” I asked and stepped back as Glade and Nevada peered at the new equipment.

“It's a mana monitoring device. In theory, I made it for Tiger, but it's really for our allies. That Incineroar will get false data,” Coordinator Cooper explained and attached the black and silver band to the doll.

“False data?” I asked.

The Granbull laughed as he stepped away.“That damn Committee can order me to make them something, but who said I had given them all the information they wanted?”

“Yeah!” Nevada waved a claw.

Glade pumped her fist before she sliced through the air. “Let's freaking get 'em back!”

I grit my teeth.“They wanna push us around?”

“Kill and take away our Leaguemates?” The Totodile growled.

The Charmander shot out an ember. “And get off scot free!?”

“Well think again!” the Totodile and Charmander yelled in unison.

Coordinator Cooper sighed as he brushed his fur. “Please pick up the sword, swing it, and then swing it at this modified Substitute.”

I took a deep breath and reached for the blade handle with both hands. The black sword was still heavy but as I adjusted my weight I got it steady into the air, and primed for battle. With a grunt I tensed my arms and swung the blade in a diagonal arc toward the stalks and field of grass below. Some of the blades of grass flew off into the sky and I swung again.

A small white light slowly pulsed and then remained lit from where my hands gripped on the handle. The curved arrow shape deep into the handle was bright, unlike last time.

My eyes narrowed as I locked onto the Substitute. The black sword was still a bit difficult to maneuver but I spread my legs as I pulled the blade's edge behind me. How could I swing it the hardest? My hands, arms, and shoulders trembled with every moment.

What if I channeled a move into my body for extra strength?

I closed my eyes and took in grass-type mana from the crispy air around me and an Energy Ball coursed its way into my palms. The hilt of the blade flashed dark-green. I yelled as I pulled the black sword up toward the sky and crashed right into the Substitute Doll.

“Woah, that's insane!” the Charmander and Totodile cheered.

The stitching of the cloth held stalwart as the blade bounced backward, and took me along with it.

“Watch out!” Coordinator Cooper pulled Nevada and Toko out of the way as I plummeted to the ground, and the black sword flew into the air.

“Nice stuff Linus.” Glade grinned and helped me up. “Just wait and see what I can do!” The Totodile walked over to the blade, which had sunk into the grass. She pulled its handle upright.

Glade and Nevada both followed Coordinator Cooper's instructions with similar results to mine. The Totodile and the Charmander sliced at the Substitute Doll just like I did.

“Aw what?” Glade yelled, as a hollow thunk echoed off the doll and she remained on the ground.

Nevada's tail flame dimmed down as the black sword simply pressed into the Substitute. “Not good.”

The blue water-type mana of Aqua Tail and orange fire-type mana of Flamethrower were fierce on their bodies and flashed on the curved arrow but still it was different.

“Nice work y'all!” I pumped my fist. “As Team Leader I think I showed an example of what ta strive for.

Glade hurrumped as she dusted herself off. “It was better than last time, but you must have cheated.”

“Wha, I’d nevar cheat!”

“Yeah Linus, being Team Leader doesn't mean you're automatically the strongest!” Nevada puffed out a little ember.

"Y’all do somethin’ better then!”

“Fascinating!” Toko clasped her sheathed claws together and mimed the motions of the blade. “Such power!”

Coordinator Cooper watched the screen of the box and tallied down something, presumably numbers on a clipboard he had brought with him.

“Can we take the sword with us?” I asked, my tails slowly raised.

“No, it's still a bit of a risk, perhaps after this mission, depending on how things go.” Before we could even say anything the Granbull turned to the Sneasel. “Now Toko.”

“Yes Coordinator?” Toko stood up straight with her arms by her sides.

“You can try picking up the black testing sword if you'd like.”

What? He's just moving on to her ? I got that she's new and unlike Jin could actually use the black sword but why? How can Coordinator Cooper just move on? I know I said help us with the Disruption and the rehabilitation of the world's mana by any means necessary, but it's too fast for Toko to advance like this. Maybe we're too slow. Or I'm the slow one.

The Sneasel knelt down toward the blade. “Understood.”

Like she could do better than Yoshiko or Austin. I took a step back as Toko sheathed her claws and touched the black sword.

“Woah!” The Sneasel gasped as she dropped to the ground, and held her right claw.

Ha, I knew it.

With a deep breath she got low and placed both claws on the handle of the blade.

Wait.

Toko's ears folded down as she bared her teeth and pulled with all her might. The black sword slowly but surely lifted higher and higher off the grass. It wobbled side to side before the Sneasel held it steady, in a stance firm and swung it.

“Satisfactory results?” Toko asked. The blade fell out of her claws and she staggered onto the ground.

My jaw dropped. She swung it?

Claps erupted from Glade, Nevada, and Coordinator Cooper’s claws. “Way to go Toko!” they cheered.

“Surprised ya did so well,” I grumbled and faced away from the four of them. I can't believe it! She really is fast. Mon at this rate what will I be good for?

“Surprised?”

I nodded as I heard a rustling noise in the grass.“But-”

“I’d like you all to come to the office,” Chief McBone barked as she skidded to a halt in front of me.

I nearly stumbled over as I stared up at the Stoutland. I forgot how fast she was even as a Stoutland, holy Mew!

“Now?” Glade questioned.

Chief McBone nodded.“Now. Before you get too carried away.”

“Again?” I asked, as I ran a hand down my arm.

“Well the newly arrived special Connection Orb is there.”

Nevada's eyes widened. “The what!?”

“Come quickly now,” the Stoutland huffed in a low bark. “Leader Magearna's first seminar will begin shortly.”

We made our way back inside the League and headed back up to the third floor. The Granbull ahead of us opened the door to the office and the six of us entered.

There sat Chad, Diamond, Mienfoo, Slowbro, Rio, and River.

Now that I've seen them up close, I noticed that the Herdiers had a navy blue scarf on, with an odd circular badge. That was the badge Paradise Ranchers had.

I guess Anabel and Bernard were still on watch as always, maybe next time.

Coordinator Cooper walked over to the desk, and reached into a tall cabinet beside it, with a small blue key in his paws. He then pulled out a blue sphere with a grey thin rod sticking out of it, one slightly bigger than an Escape Orb or a Rollcall Orb.

“Greetings everyone!~” a metallic voice, the voice of Leader Magearna called out from the device, the Connection Orb.

Leader Magearna talked about mana artifacts and the Disruption. But most importantly they said one word. One word that made the Herdier twins cry.

“With research from Team Vanguard-”

My own eyes watered.

Leader Magearna kept talking, they mentioned a way to end the Disruption was in our reach. Not just with the keys and locks of mana, but with the Gears of Mana inside all mana artifacts. Even ones we never heard of. All of this information.“They paved the way.”

Chad and Diamond sniffled too, tears streamed down their faces.

Memories, some of my words from about six years ago flooded my mind.

I'll make a Rescue Team with my brother and sister, and some other Pokémon! Team Swift Claw!” I said in that Mystery Dungeon, the same dark forest where I was attacked by a Pidgeotto of Wicked Blow.

Now that I thought about it, she was an unlocked Keeper, and had probably forcibly unlocked that poor Wooloo Hatchet, Kobi and I found during their exam. Misusing the elemental keys and locks of mana for a gang, that Pidgeotto was one of the Pokémon who caused the Disruption.


I have a better idea,” that confident Hillock Country accented voice, that same voice of the Midday Lycanroc who saved me from Wicked Blow echoed in my ears.“ Team Sharp Claw .”

My memories faded and I was in the real world again. Faced with the truth.

Tho-san, that kind, busy Midday Lycanroc was killed by Wicked Blow. All of the fourteen Pokémon of Team Vanguard were killed by the so-called Committees and maybe by some other group. All because of this. The knowledge to fix the world. To end and prevent the Disruption, forever.

After the first seminar, and that promise of more from Leader Magearna, and by extension, everyone else working with them, we needed to keep going. The black testing sword was something we could use, part of the Mana Regalia. The Mana Regalia let us get an even chance against unlocked Keepers, and it could help in the Rehabilitation of the world's mana.

Nevada, Glade, Toko, and I sat in the living room on the first floor. The darkening purples, blues, and dark grays of sky from the evening glimmering bright through the blinds behind us.

Everyone of us. Suffered because of those Pokémon in the Committee. I now knew what to do. “We can't just let everyone do all the hard work!” I slammed the fist onto my chest.

“Does this mayhaps mean what I think?” the Sneasel got off the floor.

The Charmander and Totodile beside us smirked. “Let's go see what you've got!”

A coating of dark-purple energy, no doubt some poison type move coated Toko's claws as she stood in front of a Substitute in the practice field.

“What move was that?” Nevada asked, their tail flame flickering hotter and brighter.

“It was a Poison Jab.”

“Can we see the others?”

“Quick Guard, Quick Attack, and Reversal.”

The Charmander cheered. “Those are great against the tactics of my Charizard and Drizzlie siblings- the current Econ Bounty Hunters.”



“Praytell?” Toko tilted her head. “They are?”



Glade grabbed the Sneasel’s shoulder. “Ugh, the field isn't right for this!”

“If I may, this is the field set aside for practice, within the limits you require of me.”

“Your moves require live training, not just wailing on some Substitute.”

I furrowed my brow as there was the faint sound of padding through the grass around us. “We all need something better than this.”

“Real freaking training!” The Totodile fist pumped.

“Like what we had with Team Whitelight on Logos Mountain!”

Toko's eyes widened. “So you did go?”

“Yep,” a different, yet familiar voice called. “And they got a bit carried away.”

“What?”

We turned around and low and behold.

“Chad, and Diamond?” I, Glade, and Nevada asked.

The Pikachu and Wartortle stood before us. “Hey Team Sharp Claw.” Diamond smirked. “We thought we'd just stop by.”

“Can you train with us?” I just had to ask.

Chad shook his head. “No.”

“Or atleast spar or something?” Glade crossed her arms.

The Pikachu sighed. “We're going on a mission out of town.”

“Out of Bristberg?” Toko questioned, her eyes wide.

“It's just a quick request in Mizu Mori, so we'll be back just around when you all will be heading home too,” The Wartortle explained.

“What?” Nevada gasped and nearly jumped into me again.

“We've all got stuff planned for you.” Chad stepped toward me and grinned. “But ours will blow your mind!”

Diamond smiled as well. “See ya on the flipside Team Sharp Claw! Keep Toko safe and be nice to our little siblings Slowbro and Mienfoo alright?”

“Will do!”

“Bye!” Chad and Diamond waved as they exited back through the stalks of grain toward the patio of the League.

The same stalks that towered over Glade, Nevada and I were just under chest height for those two. Just another difference between Team Sharp Claw and Team Aegisdrip.

Who would train us?

“I'm truly sorry Team Sharp Claw.” Chief McBone sighed and got down from her desk. “I have paperwork to fill out, information from Austin and Yoshiko. From Team Blue Heroes around Saltwater Cliffs, the area near Leader Magearna's seminar. Documents from Wally and Spyla from Team Aegisdrip. Oh and reports from Silas and Aerith, the co-captains of Team Blue Heroes-”

We backed away with a nod.

“And I'm busy with Mienfoo and Slowbro,” Coordinator Cooper explained. “We've got another part of the entrance exam to do.”

“I understand,” I said and fastened my scarf, my gaze low.

Glade and Nevada grumbled to one another while Toko just stretched out her arms with a yawn.

The Granbull walked over to us as Rio and River entered the office. “Don't worry Team Sharp Claw. We've got some more assistance today, so I think it's time you got to go on another mission.”

I turned to the Herdier twins and noticed the large saddlebags on their sides and glanced back and forth. “What?”

“Tomorrow morning, bright and early,” River explained. “We are heading to New Withered Savannah, the city that will host a new Mana Research League.”

“Oh?” Glade gasped, her massive jaw wide.

Rio stepped in when my brow furrowed. “We'll be stopping by some places to do our Paradise Ranch work and we need you to go establish League relations on our behalf.”

“Understood.” Toko bowed.

I adjusted my badge and stared at the Charmander and Totodile beside me. “Let's get ready.”

The warm light of morning came slowly, just as they always did. I got out of bed, parted the curtains, and scanned the area beside me. Alright, let's get the show on the road. “ Good morning!”

Rio and River had made breakfast: toast, eggs, bean sausages, berries, and grits. Toko, had an extra portion of Oran and Lum, and didn't mind the bean sausage at all, while I and everyone else devoured everything.

Then we were on the road.

“Estimated time of arrival?” Toko asked as we stepped onto the teal Bristberg mountains and headed south.

“New Withered Savannah is a few hours away.” River locked his eyes westbound.

“Unfortunately and perhaps fortunately The only Mystery Dungeon to get there isn't worth the risk,” Rio explained.

“Ah, no extra training,” I grumbled, and adjusted my scarf.

“More importantly there's reports of mana artifacts along this mountain-desert, southwestern Bristberg, northern Legend Eclipse, and northeastern New Withered Savannah.”

“Then we best hurry up and find em!” Glade yelled and dashed ahead, past the town limits.

Nevada chased after her. “Slow down! Rio and River said Libra and A would deal with it!”

The Herdiers gazed at Toko and I before they chuckled. “Ever zealous eh? Well, we best get a move on.”

We got lower down off the towering mountain tops, and weaved our way slightly towards sea-level minute by minute. Still high above the valleys we got closer to Hunter's Plains, the rocky ground grew sandier, with small clusters of grass appearing more often.

Soon, after about two or so hours we reached the yellowing mountainous hills above Legend Eclipse. Directly to the west was the Electro Sun Mountain Range, a beautiful set of orange, clay, yellow, and brown small mountains where we'd cross into New Withered Savannah. That Mountain range was nearly always in view when I lived in Hunter’s Plains, but now it was just a distant landmark.

About three hours passed and the sun's warmth really kicked in. The overall desert climate grew more pronounced with every dry gust of wind, passed stray Cacnea, and Bramblghast family. Not to mention the frequenting sand dunes even right beside the hillocks. New Withered Savannah would be in our reach soon, the Herdier twins promised us this after our break. The desolate and nearly barren land around us sent a shiver up my spine, but I saw the torch marked, and clearly traveled path ahead of us, which led through a section of mountains and over to the city. We weren't in straylands, which also meant we had to be careful.

As usual River stayed behind, but with his huge nose I heard his rate of sniffing increase.

Rio lowered her ears and the Herdiers pushed us into a tighter formation. We edged closer and closer to the mountain's narrow passage.

In my eyes the two looked unnaturally tense, just like when Knight and Spellbound came to the League. River and Rio were Keepers after all, other Keepers couldn't easily sneak up on them, especially if they were unlocked.

“Who goes there!” River growled, his eyes wide.

Out of the sand dune came two Pokémon, a Starmie and a Charabug.

“We went through all the trouble of stealing this from Prismacolor Plains and now we get stopped!?” The Starmie's warbled watery voice spat.

That's just where we were a few days ago! Before Nevada's siblings’ Bounty Hunters supposedly took the Treasure of Tapu Koko. It was taken by some other thugs instead!?

River narrowed his eyes. “Excuse me?”

“Move aside punks!” The Charabug strained forward with the huge bag. “And what’s with that Sneasel?”

“Eyes over here pal!” Rio growled.

The Starmie flashed a dark pink color, and the barrier of Light Screen on him and the Charabug. “Nevermind! Better yet, gimme all your stuff!”

“They're unlocked Keepers!” The Herdiers barked.

“I think you all would make fine additions to our gang, we'll climb the ranks with you in no time!”

Operation: Strike!” My heart pounded fast as I stared at the sand around the two Pokémon. “Get ready y'all!”

Both wore a black and white striped scarf, but more importantly was the giant bag behind them, a large bladed point, peaked out from a tear. Whatever it was, it called to me.

“It's Wicked Blow, Team Sharp Claw! Engage!” Rio ordered.

“Let's just get this over with little Paradisers!” The Charabug shot out a Discharge of electricity.

Shoot! It'll hit all of us! Gotta get closer! The huge swath of power blasted through the dusty air and straight into each of our bodies to the sand at our feet. While the crackle blasted through me, almost harmlessly, I launched closer.

Before the yellow static tagged through Glade’s scales Toko darted in front of her. The current fizzed out from existence as a red translucent wall blocked it.

“What!?” The Charabug screamed.

“Do not fret!” The Sneasel's body gleamed bright red.

The Totodile smirked as Toko patted her shoulder. “Thanks!”

My eyes lit up as the red segmented barrier move disbursed from Glade’s scales. Woah! That was Quick Guard! Toko could just block an attack like that?

“Don't think we don't know who you four are!” The Starmie shot out a beam of ice towards me. “League scum!”

“What will that accomplish for you?” The Sneasel brandished her claws as she backed away.

“Get down!” Nevada blasted through the Ice Beam with a Flamethrower.

The powerful gale of frigid wind melted straight into a plume of vapor, and consumed the fire.

With a garbled scoff the Starmie fumed.“We're not just any Wicked Blow members,” he yelled. “We're second vice captains of Amelia Weavile's Xi 20 gang! We reign supreme!”

River stepped forward as he reeled from the shock. “Get the bag!”

I took in normal-type mana from the air and channeled Slam deep into my legs.

“Don't get cocky brat!” The Charabug slid in front of the bag at me and nearly stumbled forward. “We can't touch ‘em but It's from those stupid Econ Bounty Hunters, not something for your pitiful mitts!” Her jaws glew light green with Bug Bite, and then the light flashed.

The intensity of the attack grew and my knees nearly buckled. What was that!?

“But you're Keepers!” I growled as I shoved back against her, and my arms gave out. “You can't even use these mana artifacts!”

“Doesn't matter!”

Rio pushed me away from the Charabug before her jaws flashed a bright orange flame. The Herdier's Fire Fang blazed through the skin. But still the Charabug stood firm, and something in the bag behind her glowed green.

A Reviver Seed! Crap, these two are smarter and stronger than they look!

A purple blur shot right beside Rio, as the Charabug flinched.

“I got one!” Toko yelled, she dropped to the ground as she lugged out an enormous three-pointed glaive.

It was almost larger than my entire body, and there was another one.

“Operation: Steam!” I yelled.

Glade and Nevada shot forward and grabbed the bag.

The Starmie flipped immediately away from me and screamed. “Nooo! Stop them!”

“Back off!” The Totodile pulled back her fist and punched him with Brick Break.

He didn't flinch and instead spun around toward Toko in rapid white blur.

The Charmander grabbed onto one of the Starmie's points with Dragon Claw and held on for dear life.

“Give it ta me!” I yelled.

The Sneasel grit her teeth and roared. Could she do it? She locked eyes with me and pulled fighting-type mana from our surroundings, and straight into her body. The silver three pointed glaive flew through the air.

As the triple-axel sliced in between Toko, Charabug, Rio, and Starmie I saw it. The shimmer of the empty slots of all three handles.

Giga Drain practically burst through my whole upper body as my hands grazed one of the handles. Something inside me pulled the glaive straight toward the Starmie. A powerful bright light radiated off his body. In one motion the blades sliced across from one arm, over his red gem, and down to one of his bottom arms.

My body all but collapsed as the Starmie flew backwards from the attack.

Power from a real Mana Regalia. Unbridled, by the hands of a Pokémon unworthy, ones unable to even hold it. Now in our grasp. No, my grasp.

Might incarnate. Retribution for all those slain and ruined in a conquest for the elemental keys and locks of mana.Was this the taste of unlocked power?


And it still wasn't enough.

“Retreat!” Charabug burrowed her head deep into the dirt before she spat out a plume and torrent of gritty sediment.

Starmie shot across the sand with a Rapid Spin and picked her up as the gusts of wind intensified. I couldn't see my hands in front of me, but the heavy weight of the glaive grounded me through the blasts of sand.

Then it stopped.

“They're gone.” River's comment snapped me out of my haze.

I dropped the giant glaive as the Starmie and Chargabug disappeared in the grains of the sandstorm. “Finally, it's over.”

Toko darted away from the crumbling sandpit before us and sighed. With the Charmander and Totodile right next to them the Sneasel sheathed her claws.

“That was something.” Glade stumbled over with a grunt.

Nevada followed her with a sigh. “Guess we're still not strong enough?”

Rio and River exchanged positions of their noses to the ground and their eyes and ears up to search the land. “I'm glad we're all safe.”

“We've should'a put ‘em in the damn dirt for Arceus’ sake!” I growled as I stamped the ground.

“Are you not pleased we got them to retreat?” Toko cheered.

“I don't understand how you are!” I pushed the Sneasel against the mountainside.

Toko stumbled back and used her palms to hold me away. I watched as she tried not to scratch me with her claws as she accidentally knocked me over.

“What the voidlands is going on with you!?” Glade yelled but my glare froze the Totodile in her tracks.

Toko's stronger than I realized! I stared and shot back at the Sneasel. And she's taller too ugh, I hate still being at Treecko height!

“Linus!?” Rio gasped and dashed over to us. In the blink of an eye I crashed onto the sandy soil again.

River blocked Toko with his body and peered into my eyes. “Explain yourself!”

“How do you keep that act up, Toko?!” I yelled and climbed off the ground.

“What act?”

“The act of how yur just energetic and ya just keep going and never give up!”

“An act?”

“Even though I've only known you for a little bit, I don't understand.”

“Linus, she's herself you know.” Rio asserted. “Everyone handles losses in different ways, we know a thing or three about it.”

“I just need ta understand!”

“You need to listen to us!” River stamped straight through a small boulder. “We’ve dealt with this before! Our own former teammates, of Team Vanguard, who we’ve known for years, were gone in an instant because of those Pokémon leading the Committee!”

The air felt silent after the Herdier dropped that on me. Why was I like this? I’m always like this… “It doesn’t matter! I… Please Toko, tell me how.”

“Could you?” Nevada finally spoke up, their claws on my shoulders. “I'm sorry Toko, Linus takes being Team Captain way too far sometimes. I'm sorry we can't handle him.”

“I understand. It was not easy.” The Sneasel held her bandaged sides and winced. “I speak truly. It is very hard. You do not know what I have been through and what the Committee has done to us.”

“Ya don't know what we've been through either-”

“Jin told me as much information as possible and because of that they did everything in their power to make our lives miserable.”

“What is he going through?” the Charmander puffed out a tiny wisp of smoke.

“Tell us what he's actually going through!” Glade begged, her eyes wide.“Not what Spellbound told you to say!”

Toko's eyes drifted down.“The Committee staff will not kill him, they shall do everything but that.”

“How?” I gasped. “How do you even know that?”

The Charmander's tail flared before they huffed.“Those guys are crazy!”

“Well, they know that some organization can track if we, the ones from Hisui, die. It is not the League but one of your allies.”

“Our hidden allies,” the Totodile grumbled. “Everyone's been bringing them up more and more lately.”

“They've done so much for the League, helping Leader Magearna find out about those Gears of Mana, much more than what I've done,” I grumbled. “Even with these Greavard-gone glaives!”

The Sneasel shook her head. “False, you took in me and Jin.”

“We were just followin’ orders!”

“You know that is not true.”

My cheeks flushed. “Fine… I'm sorry.”

“That is why I shall not falter. I have to because this is what Jin would want me to do.”

“But, I can’t deal with this loss and every other loss properly,” I yelled. “I lashed out at you, and everyone else! I always do!”

“It is okay,” Toko explained.

“How?”

“Even after the Committee sent me here. This loyal servant of Sinnoh thought she was going to die- ” the purple-Sneasel paused to shiver, “or worse. But now that I'm here I refuse to yield.”

“Thank you.” I stepped away from her. “I haven't mastered my emotions and took everything out on ya. It wasn't fair, it's not like ya wanted to be here. I'm sorry, I truly am sorry.”

Toko grinned as she dusted off her fur. “Apology accepted. But do not think I will hold back!” She flexed her arms, a claw firm on her scarf and badge.

“Well, I'm glad you're determined to stay by our League's side.” River gestured to the weapons on the sand. “However the new issue is the Mana Regalia, this pair of glaives.”

“What's tha problem?” I rubbed my sore joints as an ache coursed through me.

Rio sighed as she fiddled with the small Connection Orb on her harness. “Dad didn't trust you to bring along the black testing sword and now we have the real deal.”

“Ah.” I glanced down at them. “Okay.”

“Hello?” the Herdier's call echoed through the area, but more specifically into her Orb.

… A muffled, staticky voice, one I couldn't hear replied back.

“Yeah, uh we ran into some unlocked Wicked Blow vice captains.”



“From Xi 20, Amelia Weavile's gang, and um,” River laughed a little. “They escaped.”



“More importantly we found some of the Mana Regalia. What should we do?”



“You sure Mom?”



“Okay Dad.”



“Farewell!”

The Connection Orb shut off.

“Okay little Fangs of the Fallen,” River said as he approached us. “You each need to try out the glaives. Keep the Mana Regalia safe with your lives.”

Rio pawed at the sand. “First let's secure them.”

“Got it.” Nevada and Glade lugged each of the massive glaives and shoved them inside the bag.

“Don't take them out until we reach the New Withered Savannah League.” The Herdiers' instruction was clear as they turned away.

“What shall I do?” Toko asked, her ears twitching.

“Don't worry. You can help those three master it, like with the black testing sword.”

“I shall do my best!”

“Let's continue.”

Underneath the hazy sky and above the warm dunes of sand sat Killamanjaro’s Peak, the mountain that grazed the zenith. One that held a few Mystery Dungeons, the foundation for New Withered Savannah itself, and the way to a very special building. The dusty sandstone and cream path before us led all the way to a towering three-story building, one familiar to my eyes in design.

The new League. There were other small tan buildings below it trimmed with pastel blue, dusty yellow, and clayish brown. An entire city waited before us, the bustle and commotion of Pokémon echoed out from the depths.

We made it to New Withered Savannah.

A low whistling call pierced the air and brought my attention to our immediate surroundings.

On the sandy mountain ledge before us stood five small Pokémon, and I nearly had a double take as I actualized two of them. A Fighting-type Farfetch’d and an Eiscue basked in the cooling breeze, their black, green, and gold plaid scarves blowing in the wind.

“Wait a minute?” The Totodile pointed up at them.

The Charmander furrowed their brow. “Kenji and Algoa?”

“You know those Pokémon?” Rio questioned.

How could I forget? Those two fight-crazed goofballs ambushed us in Bristberg Highland Mystery Dungeon like four days ago! If anything they were at least nice, but only weary of Jin. And their Mercenary company owed the Econ Bounty Hunters enough money to threaten all of Bristberg. Somehow.

“We met on a mission recently. They worked at my old job,” I said with a smirk, my tails waving.

“Really?”

I nodded.“With the Black Clover Mercenaries.”

And beside the two, were a Quaxly, a Sprigatito, and a Fuecoco, also similarly attired. They had every corner under their stern gazes, and surrounded the taller Pokémon.

“And who are those guys with them?”

River sighed and continued forward. “We won't know until we get a move on, let's go.”

The sounds of life grew louder and louder, even as we neared the road less taken, there weren't any travelers on this route. They all took the south or western entrances from Pokémon I saw, braving the sandy air high above the land.

In the dusty path beyond us I shuddered. A mirage, one typical of a desert, hit me.

Far into the depths of the orange ocean of sand. There it was.

“Now what is it?” Rio perked her ears up.

I gasped as my eyes trained on the brief image. “There's something, someone… a Pokémon. A ghost of a Pokémon.”

“Of w-what?” Nevada shivered.

That image flashed inside my mind and my heart pounded. Mirages faded, and visions faded, unlike life.

“Not a what, but… a who.” I held my chest.

“Who?” Toko asked, her eyes narrowed.

Life never faded.

“One like Jin.”
 
Chapter 25/ Interlude 3- Heroic Blues Part 1

Kiba Makuro

Junior Trainer
Pronouns
He/Him, They/Them
Originally Posted April 30th, 2024
Ported October 15th, 2024

Chapter Summary
Those who have great responsibility deserve great power, correct?

Libra Riolu's POV​


Torrents of sand, rocks, and grit tumbled around us as I and the Froakie fell. Rushing winds pushed against my back; I stretched my paws out to try and stop my crashing descent. I couldn't believe it. A-chan and I got caught in a trap from Wicked Blow.

As I dropped off the mountain, a chunk of rock bashed into the back of my head. The world went dark.

In light’s absence, I felt it once again. The horrid memory of Devolution: my body transforming from that of a Lucario back into a Riolu. Just like before, the pairs of tassels on the sides of my head merged. A throbbing ache barreled throughout my skull. The spikes of silver and tin, sank back into the depths of my chest and my forearms, and I screamed out in agony. My limbs, and entire body shrank again with a violent crush and pulse. I cried out as my steel elemental typing escaped my very bones. Blinding onslaught of pain coursed through me, just like when I became a Riolu again.

With a gasp, I rolled over to the side, my limbs trembling. Holy Volcanian… why must I remember that!? I opened my eyes and took in the clay mountain ground below me covered in orange-yellow rocks and dust. That was the past, I won't have to ever go through that again. I staggered off the floor and saw the mouth of a cave before me. The darkness of the maw consumed all, a Mystery Dungeons might at work.

Beside me, in a ball of his white back bubbles lay a sprawled out Froakie, A-chan. His eyes spiraled as he mumbled to himself and sat up.

I shifted over to A. “You okay?”

“No,” he groaned.

“Hey!” I trudged over to him.

A blinked as he clutched his arms and back. “Glad we survived the fall eh, Libra?”

“Yeah,” I replied with a stretch. “Where are we?”

The Froakie rubbed his nose and peered side to side. “Brittlesand Sierra… Probably the bottom floor.”

“Oh for Lugia's gale!” I gasped. “We need to go, come on.”

A bolted upright and practically flew towards the cave entrance. “We've got to get back to Rosario and Hatchet!”

“I know!”

The Froakie pointed at the mountainside we fell from. “They're up there, and it's definitely not safe!”

I got up and caught up to him, then we rushed back into the mouth of the cave. My paws crushed back into the rough grit of the mountain and I sighed. As I felt the crunch of soil, my eyes scanned the halls of the Mystery Dungeon. There was nothing for the moment, no items, no Pokémon, just the empty still land.“There's barely time to waste fighting anything in our way,” I growled. “No matter what.”

The Froakie beside me pointed ahead. “We can't afford to be careless though, come on.”

My Gold-rank badge twinkled in the refracted light of the sun. “I’ll call for help.” I pushed at one of the wings on the triangular badge. I pray the waters above, the request actually went through out here.

"Rescue Team Federation of Constellation Sands. How can I help ya?" a deep rumbling voice came out of the small speakers.

I cleared my throat. "Team Blue Heroes, located in Brittlesand Sierra Floor One,” I explained. “Wicked Blow presence in the surrounding Mystery Dungeons. Requesting assistance."

“Understood, take care,” the voice called.

A flashed me a thumbs up.“Nice work, but we aren’t gonna wait for ‘em!”

We had to hurry. Hurry, through these Mystery Dungeons. That's always what we're supposed to do. And I couldn't even escort two adult Pokémon with A. I buried my paws against my throbbing temples.“I can't believe I failed them!”

“You didn't fail them,” A replied, also nursing his head with every step we took.

“I did fail them, just like I failed Team Sharp Claw, like before the Disruption, all those years ago.”

“How?”

My ears folded back.“I was supposed to make sure that they got to Bristberg safely. I couldn't focus when they talked about ferals wrong like that. Our family shouldn't be taken lightly. Oh, and saying Sentinels are useless, what do they know?”

“Yeah that was ridiculous. But what do you mean you couldn't focus?” the Froakie asked. “You dealt with that Monster House and pushed them out of the way of the trap just fine.”

I groaned as my back ached. Lingering pain from the fall and our battles caught up to me despite the natural healing powers of the Mystery Dungeon. “Rosario’s attitude pissed me off, I can't believe they're really a former Pokemon trainer. But it didn't matter, I still shouldn't have said that stuff.”

A crossed his arms before he spoke.“You didn't say anything wrong. We've got to switch gears to our new objective.”

“But I’m still such a failure as a leader.”

“You didn't fail them, you couldn't have known that would have happened Libra…Let it go. We’re still Team Blue Heroes, through thick and thin.”

I nodded as we clambered up the sandy Mystery Dungeon staircase. “You're right. I won't let it distract me further.”

A grinned back at me and ruffled my shoulder. “We need to make sure we take care of Wicked Blow when we see ‘em.”

Once again we ventured further through the winding maze of halls.The mountain up weren’t anything like the ones I’ve seen on the Water or Air Continent, just a ton of sand all across the ground. Sparkling dry air, pebbles, and dirt filled the top barrier of soil, and wafted into my nose. Beyond the rough mountainside, the dusty ceiling above rumbled. Something was happening.

Along the subtle rises and dips and winding maze an aura slowly and steadily drummed. There's still that powerful Pokémon up ahead, somewhere. Thunderclap every single step, just like before.

Two subtle bits of aura, of regular feral Pokémon moved back and forth somewhere nearby. Mystery Dungeons made it hard to exactly tell what direction Pokémon approached from, so it wasn't like aura gave us perfect foresight.

I peered in a branching room and spotted three more entrances right nearby, mountain walls and stone in between. And Pokémon were coming. From the left, a Jigglypuff and a Fletchling made their way to an alcove beside us.

With a breath, I pulled the fighting-type mana for Force Palm into my paws, while A readied up a Water Pulse. The red energy pooled across my body while the dark blue spear of water wavered in the air beside the Froakie's hands, both aimed at our potential enemies.

The two feral Pokémon glanced at one another and then backed away from us. The Fletchling flew away toward the mountains, while the Jigglypuff waddled further from the path next to A and I.

I couldn’t help but sigh as we hurried past them and into another room. Good thing we avoided that fight . The room we found ourselves in had stairs. We rushed up the last light-yellow staircase of Brittlesand Sierra and made it back to the beginning of Needlemaw Peak, where the massive imprint was in the ground.

My nose twitched as I scoured the ground and shook my head. “Where’d that drill and those chains go?” I grumbled as I walked past it. “Along with the massive hole in the Manaphy damn ground!”

“The trap must have magically repaired the soil.” The Froakie beside me shrugged.

An electrical pulse trembled from above, further into Needlemaw Peak.

“Libra!” A's voice echoed through the narrow halls. “What's going on?”

I winced as the shocks slowly dissipated. My fur tingled from the new polarity in the air. “I’m not too sure, but let’s keep going,” I explained as I shuffled closer to him.

“Yeah!”

Just a few pathways stood in front of us. We took the one with disturbed soil, it looked traveled, with faint footsteps in the ground. My tassels and nose sensed a soft bit of faded aura and I swallowed as we slowly crept around a corner to a new area of the mountain. This led to a small room with a knocked out Spinarak.

Eventually further through the same floor of the Mystery Dungeon, A stopped dead in his tracks and pointed to the left. My eyes followed his trembling hand and I found the fainted limp body of a Revaroom. no essence of draconic or electrical energy on them this time. Hatchet and Rosario didn't put this feral in.

“If those two didn't do it-” I pondered aloud.

A cut me off. “P-probably Wicked Blow. I'm not sure those two are ready.”

I grumbled at the thought. “Me neither.”

The Froakie adjusted his bubbles.“Hatchet is Linus's younger brother right? How'd the Axew end up so foolish?”

“They did spend the last six years apart, when Linus left home.”

“Left home, oh yeah. Now that I think about it, I wonder how Team Sharp Claw is doing?”

“That's a great question, maybe we can find out later.”

“But waiting ‘til we get back to the League will take forever!” A fake cried.

I clenched my fists. “Waiting… I don't know why but this reminds me of Wei Forest.”

“Libra.”

“What if we got separated in there?”

“Libra, come on.”

“What if Young Master Xuě Zeraora was older? What if she was stronger?!”

“Libra!”

“What?”

The Froakie placed a hand on my shoulder and put another hand on his chest.“I believe in Hatchet and Rosario. Try not to think about it, okay? I know it's hard but please.”

I still felt like such a disappointment, but for him I gave him a wry smile.“Okay.”

“Thank you.”

We continued throughout the darker, more red-orange and brown mountain, finer sand still scattered about the ground. Sharper, more jagged stones lined the insurmountable peaks above.

Like before there were no conscious Pokemon in this area. Rather none that approached us, as I noticed a fleeting trace of aura as we entered more and more rooms around. In the path before us a Pawmo and a Buizel, laid unconscious along the floor, a pile of a rock-type and ground-type moves all around them.

Definitely wasn't Hatchet or Rosario. Maybe other ferals took this Pawmo and Buizel out… Or maybe Wicked Blow. I shuddered as A and I hurried down the hall past the knocked out Pokémon into another room.

The Froakie paused and I stopped in my tracks and studied our surroundings, a narrow passage of orange-clayish wall, carved straight off the mountain. A slight indent on the stones, one from a three-fingered claw drew me in toward the left portion.

“A Pokemon attack?” the Froakie asked.

I sniffed at the wall. “There’s traces of draconic energy on it… And fresh.”

“It could be from, a feral Pokémon, or Hatchet, or Volcanian forbid, Wicked Blow.”

“That's not the only odd thing about this wall, the pattern on it. These bricks are kinda weird.”

“Look at this bricklaying, the techniques are quite fascinating.” A ran a finger along the wall, in between each ridge and line of the sealant.

I sniffed as a strong staticy aura bolted through the mountain. Shimmering crackles lit up through the air, all the way from one point on the walls A and I stood in between. “Some Pokemon, perhaps the ancients of this land-”

“Near Hunter’s Plains, Electro Sun Mountain Range,” the Froakie reminded me.

“Yeah, those Pokemon, they made this in the past.” I took a couple of steps toward the sparkling wall, small whips and whirls of yellow plasma danced along its surface.

“There's some Pokémon on the other side,” A said and clenched his scarf. “Feeling their aura like this makes me almost regret Master Dodrio's training.”

“Then I'd be one of the only on our team who understands how it feels to sense powerful Pokémon.”

A waved a hand. “I mean our co-captains, Silas and Aerith are Keepers.”

“That Salamence and that Comfey are also like quite a few years older than us, they’ve seen worse.”

“Yeah but I haven’t! It's scary as all Voidlands Libra, the anticipation is killing me!”

“Not even Yoshiko or Austin have wimped out that bad.” I ruffled my neck fur. “Those two are out at Leader Magearna's seminars and doing their part. Even further away from home and the League's help.”

“Yeah but those two are lucky… They didn't devolve, they got to stay as a Groyvle and a Charmeleon… They're stronger than us. Libra we're good, but there are Pokémon that we can't handle. I've felt their aura nearby.”

“I’d be lying if I said I wasn’t scared shitless too. It's an asset for us as we don't have a Keeper presence and can sense basically everything.”

“Define asset?” His hand pointed to a raised portion of the wall, the bricks lifted straight from the surroundings. Near the bottom chunk of stone, an opening waited.

“Probably the powerful Pokémon aura I…” I paused. “No, we felt earlier.”

The Froakie nodded as he grabbed the base of the brick protrusion. “We warned Rosario and Hatchet about them and Wicked Blow. But we have to be careful ourselves. There's reinforcements from the Rescue Team Federation coming soon, but we don't know how long that could take.”

I sighed as he pushed up the wall part of the way up, and I placed my paws on the other end. “Maybe a team from our League is nearby?” My question strained as I pushed up on the heavy stones, my arms and upper body trembling.

“There were a few teams that were supposed to go on missions in the areas close by,” A added while his grip nearly slipped, the wall almost taller than my crouching height. “Like Team Aegisdrip, Whitelight, and Sharp Claw.”

With a roaring rumble, the bricks swung upright and another part of the wall slammed directly into my hip.

“What in Kyorge’s rings!?” I screamed, as the stones threw me into the Froakie and we crashed onto the other side of the wall.

“You think I know!” He screamed back as he tumbled under the bricks along with me.

Behind the wall was a world I never imagined, one dark, humid, and packed to the brim with dust and grit. Gentle orange light bathed my eyelids and I groaned.

With my chin firm on the ground I watched as A crawled off the floor.

“Up we go, doggy.”

“Thanks, A-chan.”

“Thought I told you to stop calling me that.” We both said at the same time.

I laughed and rolled my shoulders.

A giggled as well as he stretched.

We're so stupid. As my joints cracked, I got to take in more of our surroundings: an orange-clayish mountain merged with a dark grey cave, and what was within that cave. More and more of the darkness was illuminated bit by bit from torches along the walls.

The Froakie beside me gasped. In the depths of the cave, towering above us were particular narrow towers, minarets.

My eyes studied more of the area. The building in the center was a light beige mosque, with gorgeous black stone doors, their massive weight and height evident in the droning thud as it shook back and forth above the opening.

In that opening I saw the stripes of a few Legendaries represented by Zodiac Taurus: Zygarde and Groudon.

“This style of mosaics,” A called out. “The composition of the various crystals and gems used in each color seems familiar.”

I nodded. “It's a style that dates back about two hundred years ago, from the Water Continent. South of Serene Village.”

He rubbed his chin. “Maybe it was made by our ancestors?”

Deep inside a Mystery Dungeon, toward the very top floor, this structure was hidden away.

“This is a Mana Temple…” I gasped. “An elemental key and lock of mana could rest here.”

“By Kyorge!” the Froakie yelped, his eyes wide with fraught. “What can we even do?”

“I’m not sure.”

“We’re not Keepers.”

“We could guard the outside?” I offered.

A sighed as he crossed his arms.“The least we can do for the others.”

The beige building before us, a Mana Temple, was full of magical grandeur. Spiraling brick designs I recognized from Legend Eclipse ordained every centri of the mosque and two surrounding minarets. But we just sat outside, unmoving, and useless.

Go inside.

A voice… One from the depths of the Mana Temple called, directed in my head.

“What?” A yelled. Directly in A's head too.

“How are we going to do that?” I asked.

You are special.

“Special?” Like what those Ditto said back in Wei?

The Master shall explain why you are special.

I blinked. “The Master?”

One of great honor.

“Honorable,” the Froakie beside me said, his eyes closed in what I presumed thought.

I shook my head.“That doesn’t exactly narrow it down.”

A counted on his fingers before he nodded. “Sounds good to me.”

“Wait,” I held out my paw. “There's a weaker aura here… Other Pokémon.”

“It's not Rosario and or Hatchet's…”

In that moment a blade of wind flew toward A and I. I vaulted off the ground with a flip while the Froakie hopped away. “It's ours!” a pair of voices cackled from in front of us.

A Butterfree and a Wishiwashi in solo form rushed out from the sides of the Mana Temple, with black and white stripes on their scarves. Wicked Blow.

“Step aside,” A ordered as he narrowed his eyes.

“Make us!” The Wishiwashi barreled toward the Froakie and I in her Schooling-form with a Waterfall. With a slight turn she zeroed in on me in a cloak of frigid rushing water, straight from the ceiling.

I weaved out of the way and collected fighting-type mana from the air. It sparked into my grasp and I bashed my paw into the Wishiwashi's side with Force Palm. The blow of red energy sent her reeling to the ground but she floated back up with a roar. I thought that would have leveled her more, but she barely flinched! Shoot, not strong enough!

A's wing blades of Aerial Ace bashed into part of the Butterfree and pushed him to the side. Not fast enough!

It seems like you need some help, Guardians.

The voices were probably not heard by the Wishiwashi and Butterfree, as they moved back toward the doors and charged more attacks.

I glanced over at A and dusted off my shoulder.

Do not fret, you shall be awarded your deserved power. It is only fair, as you are doing your duty.

They're gonna help us? A snap crackled throughout the cave as time seemed to stand still. Everything was bathed in a shimmering yellow energy, unlike an aura or mana from an attack. What was this power? The voice of the Mana Temples? How? The sound echoed even as a gentle light, a familiar white light slowly drummed from my chest. No, our chests, the Froakie across from me, was also bathed in warmth. A familiar empowering heat. From within our own bodies.

What's going on? My limbs ached for a second as they shifted in size, in density, and in strength. Pure fighting-type mana, untainted by the Disruption poured through my veins and I took in a shuddering breath. Oh. I know what this is. After five long years. Finally, Evolution again! With a roar, the steel-type energy that belonged to me flooded through my being. Aura whirling, I was once again a Lucario. Two tassels, iron spikes on my forearms, and proper everything else. I wagged my tail as I flexed my new muscles, amazing!

A torrent of water flew in wild splatters and splashes as A's size increased, and he was once again a Frogadier. He grinned as he patted his extra bubbles, and longer limbs.

Now take care of your duties, Guardians.

Time was not on our side forever and the Wicked Blow Pokemon were unchained from their stasis.

The Wishiwashi yelped once she regained control of her body.“What! They got replaced by a Frogadier and a Lucario?” The congregation of Wishiwashi voices trembled. “But the two were just in front of us!”

The Butterfree scattered a few scales as he flew toward the ceiling.“These crazy League freaks evolved during the Disruption! Let's take ‘em out and get out of here!”

“You're part of the reason I devolved!” My slightly deeper growl echoed through the area.“Wicked Blow scum!” I slammed the Wishiwashi with my Force Palm.

“What!?” she screamed.

The massive spike of red energy shot through her entire being this time and tore her Schooling-form façade into pieces. “This is my true power!”

Wishiwashi's now small white body slammed into a wall, and the impact knocked her out into a pathetic heap.

“Holy Mewtwo,” the Butterfree gasped as he flapped his wings. “Don't think you'll get off easy!”

In a flash, an Air Slash battered into my side. The three curved sky-blue slices of energy knocked me off balance but in that moment A flew. With huge sky-blue swords of Aerial Ace, the Frogadier jumped toward the Butterfree and launched at him. A's attack cut through the Butterfree's body in a flash of flying-type power, and sent his body crashing to the ground, unconscious.

The Frogadier landed beside me and glanced at the ceiling. “You okay?” His voice was a tad deeper now, just like before.

We’re so back. By Kyrogre’s grace, am I dreaming? I shifted my hips and flashed him a thumbs up. “Right as rain!”

A held out his palm to the open doors. “I have like a million questions. The most important is; can we go inside the Mana Temple? As Sentinels?”

“I guess so,” I replied and took a step forward.

Remember what we said, you two deserve this. You are performing your Guardian duties, unlike some others who are inside.

“Others inside?”

Some of which are alive, some of which have passed. Regardless, you know what you must do. The Master is waiting.
 
Chapter 25/Interlude 3- Heroic Blues Part 2

Kiba Makuro

Junior Trainer
Pronouns
He/Him, They/Them
Originally Posted June 5th, 2024
Ported October 15th, 2024

Chapter Summary
Libra and A continue onward in search for Rosario, Hatchet, and potential mana artifacts.

But will what they find be worth it in the end, when the guilty will be punished?

Libra Lucario's POV​




‘High atop Needlemaw Peak, destiny called me to the belly of an ancient cave . Not just me, but the Frogadier by my side, A. I cant believe a Mana Temple was before us: in all its grandeur, our League and others had searched far and wide across the Continent. One possibly built by my ancestors hundreds of years ago, and where ‘the Master’ awaited.’


‘To be granted the privilege to set foot into such a holy place as a Sentinel, to fix the mistakes of Keepers was amazing. A was also allowed in, and even more fantastic somehow we evolved again just to handle Wicked Blow.’


‘But I was worried about the voices from the mosque. Perhaps directly from the minarets where prayer was once called long ago, told us it was our duty. One that others failed. Some paid the price, in blood.’


Dear Aquarius of waters blue, what have we found ourselves in?


I opened my eyes from my prayer and stared at the obsidian black doors before us. We really could go inside for a first hand account of what lies inside a Mana Temple. A glanced up and down the structure before he returned his gaze to me. It was great to see him as a Frogadier again but we had more pressing matters.


“Let's go,” I said.


He nodded. “We still gotta be careful.”


With bated breath, I took my first steps into the Mana Temple. This mosque was huge on the outside and impressively massive on the inside. My eyes widened as I approached the red, black, silver, and yellow shards of painted ceramic of the Groudon mosaic. It was Primal Groudon, holy Taurus beneath. Beside it rested the green, and black shimmering markings of Zygarde. This artwork was gorgeous up close, every glimmering hue, and color on display.


Curious, on the dark beige walls behind were engravings in the shape of cobblings, bits of ore. Along the edges were patterns that reminded me of mountains and valleys, with muddy brown cave symbols every so often.


But we weren't here to gaze at the mosaic and other beautiful furnishings of the Mana Temple. We had a job to do.


A dull, dreadful aura crept over my whole body. From the eastern side of the doors. My nostrils picked up a faint, worrying scent. Carefully, I sniffed the air and took a few cautioned steps closer to the source. A followed, his webbed feet subtly squelching on the dry dusty tile.


We didn't have to look far for the source, as the two of us made it to a darker corner of the mosque. Even if it was strange, the messages… No, the warnings from the voices were true.


The price of blood was real.


My stomach lurched at the sight and scent of blue and green blood, still fresh as it painted the floor of a nearly empty room of the Mana Temple.


Empty except the four Pokémon that laid in a heap. No… Their corpses laid in a heap.


“Water's above.” Turning away, I bit down on my paw to avoid vomiting and stumbled backward. It's been a while since death met with me, and I wasn't ready to meet it again.


The Frogadier behind me fell to his knees. A wasn't prepared either. Who could be? “No,” his dampened voice warbled. “Say it isn't so Lord. Tides be upon their souls.”


My heartbeat droned in my chest as I gathered the strength to glance at the bodies. A Joltik, a Dewpider, a Dwebble, and a Tarountula. White and black stripes on their scarves, with those two dark claws marks.


“Even those in Wicked Blow don't deserve death in such a place,” A cried as he clutched his side.


What was sanctity when tainted by death? I held my tongue and gave them one last look over. Three massive puncture wounds pierced through each of their bodies. Clean and precise. If one could call a killing ‘clean’.


As my eyes scanned the decorated walls around us the mosque rumbled. Once again, a bright yellow static crackled throughout the area, the aura of the powerful Pokémon even stronger than before. I shivered as the electricity finally finished its course and placed a paw on A-chan. That same Thunderclap.


If I shivered, A practically shook, his limbs trembling and eyes wide. The Frogadier grabbed my arm and sorta dragged me out of the room. Well, more like guided my steps. “Going,” he explained in a weak voice. “Away.”


“We have to find the status of the possible elemental key and lock of mana… Even if it's scary,” I reminded him, my voice wavering with each word.


A blinked as we made toward the entrance of the Mana Temple. “Libra, you still aren't good at this.”


“Good at what?”


“Keeping me calm.”


On the left were a pair of sandy foot steps. We needed to go. “Here,” I said and held up A's hand, I placed it in between my ears.


He patted my head and gradually stopped shaking. The Frogadier kept his webbed hand up there for a moment, his eyes locked on the path before us. “Fur is so therapeutic for us scaled-mon.”


I grinned and wagged my tail for a bit. “Any mon who says they don't like head pats, is wrong.”


“Anyway, we totally got this.” A brought his hands to his scarf and triangular Gold-rank badge.


I traced my badge too. “Yep.” There was a large room ahead. We took a couple of steps along the tiled floor, and I noticed smaller, more pointed footsteps also full of sand. The mosque wasn't some place to track dirt and debris through for crying out loud.


A and I wiped a bit of the sand on our feet onto a plain straw rug and hurried into the next room. Before us stood a massive set of sandy brick stairs, there was a portion that had smaller steps and then a different portion that had a slope. Each led up to a rest point, and connected to another set of stairs that led further up the Mana Temple.


I peered at the trailing ceiling above as I made the first move. The second my paw pads touched the brick stairs a jolt barreled through my whole being.“You know how I said we got this?”

The Frogadier also held onto the side of the stairs. “Yeah.”

“Well,” I said as I took another step. “I’m sorry for lying.”

“Lying!?”

I gripped onto the railing and stared at the next steps, my eyes wide. Small teal sparks trickled down the bricks and the second they stopped my heart once again sank into my chest. White lightning, no yellow lightning flashed before us, not a figment of my anxiety riddled mind but in the physical realm.


“Come on!” A called and pulled me up the stairs. I followed him step by step all the way toward the top. We stopped just before we could see the ground of the second floor. A shiver went through my spine once again.


This power belonged to a Pokémon. One with an extraordinary aura. A Myth or Legend.


While I stood locked with some sort of paralysis the stairs rumbled. Claws clattered gently on the path before us one step at a time. Who could it be?


One called a ‘Master’ by the Mana Temple voices.


A massive yellow paw graced the ground ahead, and then another. Before I or A managed to take a step back the Pokémon who's aura we felt finally was in view.


Zeraora. Not a small white one like Xuě, but the large yellow one; Master Zeraora.


“Greetings,” their slightly deep, yet light voice called. “I sent my power as a message to come get you. I am certain both of you would recognize it.”


The Zeraora's whiskers twitched as I glanced towards A.


Aura from all those years ago, even fiercer. They stood just above my new Lucario height, even taller thanks to the steps; firm lean muscles bound with energy and impossible strength. Holy Capricorn, such power. Water dripped out of the Frogadier's mouth while metal, probably tin and steel built up in my maw and arms. That's new . “Master Zeraora?” I asked.


“Do you wish to come up here?” Master Zeraora asked, tone deepening.


“Master Zeraora you're here?” I gasped before I sank to my knees.


A lowered himself down too. “It's really you, here in this Mana Temple?


They held their arms behind their back. “Yes, try not to be too frightened. I am not here to punish you, I am here to reward you and congratulate you.”


I lifted my head as my ears perked up. “You are?” I asked.


“Why of course.” Master Zeraora grinned. “For discovering your true calling as Guardians by venturing into this place.”


“You want us to come up there?”


“There is an elemental key and lock of mana that is waiting for your proper eyes.”


“I beg your pardon!?” My eyes shot open.


A pushed my shoulders back and forth. “Did you hear that Libra? It's actually here!”


“We're going to see it,” I cheered, “maybe even secure it under League protection ourselves!”


The Zeraora before us cleared their throat and stepped to the side of the stairwell, an invitation to arise. “Well we can discuss your new status, and the mana artifacts as well, all you have to do is come up the stairs."


“Aquarius of Waters true, thank you for this splash of blessings and great fortune.” I bowed.


A finished off the prayer. “May your waves inspire us all.”


I took a glance down the stairs. Should we bring up the Wicked Blow Pokémon? “Excuse me-”


Master Zeraora tapped a claw as they gave us a bit more room. We gotta move.


“Okay let's do it.”


We clambered up the final steps and made it to the second floor of the mosque. In the center of the room sat a small lectern. Up here was another mosaic, three of them all depicting Zodiac Taurus; this time there were Landorus designs along with the others. What a shame, the other half of Zodiac Taurus weren't represented here, rock-type Legendaries or Myths.


Further in the back I and A felt two faint auras. Before we got to check out more of the room. Master Zeraora snapped their claws. “In the presence of an elemental key and lock of mana, you truly have done your part as Guardians,” they said, a soft smile on their maw.


“It's here!?” I nearly shouted. Where? I scanned left and right but didn't see it.


A stuffed his hand into his mouth to not yell. “Right in this room?!”


Master Zeraora nodded. “Yes, you two are Sentinels gifted with the ability to venture inside Mana Temples for this very reason. To protect one of the most sacred mana artifacts of all time.”


“To protect them? Is that why we got like this?” A gestured at his new Frogadier body.


“It is a shame you and many others with dormant blood of the five Continents on the Celestial Hemisphere suffered such a fate,” Master Zeraora explained. “Devolution is a cruel punishment, hatching in the Water Continent of the Terrestrial Hemisphere is not a valid crime. Especially since you decided to come back unwittingly, not to forsake the land.”


I traced my chest spike and held out my paws. “And now?”


They spread out their claws, and a flicker of sparkling dust spiraled into their grasp. “The properties of the Mana Temple allow you to take in mana undisturbed from the Disruption and evolve once again. Although I am actually unsure how.”


“What is the type of the elemental key and lock of mana here Master Zeraora?” I asked.


“Both are electricity.”


“Really?” the Frogadier clapped his hands. “Then that means Rosario could have fixed it!”


“But this whole Mana Temple isn't Zodiac Capricorn themed at all.” I rubbed my neck.


“Hmm?” Master Zeraora's whiskers twitched.


“Er, Electrical Legendaries and Mythicals, Capricorn is how we call them from the Water Continent Master Zeraora,” A rambled. “Our names are Libra and Aquarius, of Team Blue Heroes, please forgive us for being so religious to others of honor!”


“Ah yes, the Zodiac naming culture. It is alright. How fitting that I was the Myth to find it here, in this Mana Temple dedicated to the earth and all ground energy.”


“Ground…” I started, my eyes wide. “Just like the soaked ground that reflected your power all those years ago.”


“You shall have to be specific to jog my thousand year memory, I am a tad seasoned.”


The Frogadier rubbed his arms with a shudder. “Just like when we rescued Young Master Xuě.”

Master Zeraora closed their eyes and whispered something to themself before they opened them. “I do not believe I saw you at that time. I have been more vigilant ever since, especially here in this Mystery Dungeon.”

Oh right! “Have you seen a strange Pikachu with teal eyes and grey fur on their head?” I asked.


“Or an Axew with dark green stripes?” A added. “We got separated from them in Brittlesand Sierra and don't know where those two are.”


Master Zeraora waggled a finger before they responded. “Before I give you an answer, I know they came into contact with those who have paid the price. I felt their energy.” All grew silent for a moment, Master Zeraora ran a claw through their fur before they sniffed. “The voices of the Mana Temple mentioned the price of blood, correct?” they questioned, eyes narrowing slowly.


“Yes Master Zeraora,” we replied.


“Well, I was one who brought this upon the land,” they grumbled. “My justice.”


Those who had paid the price? “Wait, Master Zeraora, what is your justice?” I gasped.


“Justice?” the Frogadier echoed, his orange eyes widening. “They were the one?”

They sighed softly, their brow furrowing slightly. “I did what I had to.”


“You did?” A asked.


Master Zeraora crossed their arms as a crackle of electricity came off them into the air. “The guilty will be punished,” they said, gaze firm.


“You really did that?” I questioned, and glanced at their claws. Those same claws…


“I asked them if they would leave Wicked Blow in order to tread the right path as Keepers,” they answered. “And the four gave unsatisfactory answers.”


“So you just did that.”


Master Zeraora gritted their teeth, fangs gleaming.“Being in Wicked Blow for any amount of time is the same as wanting a permanent Disruption. To aim to commit such actions in front of me, as a Myth under oath is to forfeit your life. You are lucky the ones you mentioned were not the same… Still foolish enough to punish.”

“Master Zeraora…” I held my stomach as my tail curled between my legs. “You killed those four Pokémon.”


“Of course, I gave them a choice,” they said. “To repent or suffer the consequences. Unholy Pokémon of Wicked Blow, tarnishing the name of Single Strike Urshifu's technique. Bringers of the Disruption. I am not soft like you in the League or in the Sentinels Union.”


A fidgeted, his gaze almost on the floor before he spoke. “I know they've probably done awful things, but they could have been rehabilitated.”


“Do you know what the Pokémon of Wicked Blow nearly did?” Master Zeraora growled out the question, their roar shaking the room. “What these Pokémon could have done if I had not come here? Did you know what they were going to do?!”


“No?” I whimpered, my ears flattened. “Was the key of mana already unlocked?”


“What were they going to do?” A added in a borderline mumble.


“These Pokémon of Wicked Blow were going to further harm your companions here.” They pointed to the side of the room.


There, low near a corner, lay Hatchet and Rosario. For a second my heart once again froze. What happened? By Kyrogre’s Rings. But the Axew and Pikachu’s chests slowly rose and fell, they were just knocked unconscious. Kyorge’s Rings held firm. Still a small bit of blood stained their fur and scales. The same strong Aura of Master Zeraora was on their bodies, seeping out the incapacitating wounds.


Master Zeraora wiped their eyes before they spoke. “Wicked Blow was going to use the Pikachu and Axew’s Ether Gem to do what they almost did.”


“What did Hatchet and Rosario almost do?” My query came out soft… I believed in them but they still failed?


They poked out their claws. “That Pikachu almost changed the Gears of Mana inside both the elemental key and the lock of electricity.”

“What!?” A-chan yelped.


“We told them the exact steps on how to secure the electric key and lock for Lugia's sake!” I groaned.


“After that, those in Wicked Blow were going to take that elemental key of electricity and unlock that Joltik,” Master Zeraora sighed. “Joltik was a Keeper, so they'd stay unlocked unlike you Sentinels. What do you think would happen to you and the others of this land?”


A raised his hand to answer. “We’d suffer major setbacks in the Disruptions Rehabilitation, more bloodshed, and havoc.”

Eyes narrow, they growled. “And much more, because of those Ether Gems ending up in the wrong grasp. These are pure collections of mana, which slept inside hidden Ether Shrines far into or above the earth. Ether Gems are used for a variety of Mana Artifacts. You need a Slate of the Forgotten, contact with an Ether Gem or an abundance of power, such as mine to reach an Ether Shrine.”

“That's right!” I shouted, before I lowered my voice. “My apologies, Hatchet and Rosario do have two Ether Gems.”


“What were they going to do with the gems?” the Frogadier asked, and ran a hand in his bubbles.


Master Zeraora took in a breath. “They were about to temporarily ruin the elemental lock and key of electricity, making it more difficult for us to solve this Disruption. That cannot be allowed, so as the ones deemed guilty, they were punished.”


“I understand,” I sighed. I still don't understand why they had to be so violent. But what can I say, I knocked out Wicked Blow Pokémon today with only a few questions asked. Am I really much better? Though the Rescue Team Federation is coming to collect them, alive.


Master Zeraora nodded. “It is regrettable that that happened.”

“Thank you for sparing Rosario and Hatchet,” A sighed.


“You may revive these two,” they said before they let out a breath. “I wish to speak with them and unfortunately I do not have any Reviver Seeds on my person.”


“Understood Master Zeraora,” we replied.


Master Zeraora softened up and looked at us. "I never got the chance to say it before, but thank you. You and your other companions, who are also special mind you- saved Young Master Zeraora. My child… My daughter Xuě."


Special huh? Team Sharp Claw were called Fangs of the Fallen I suppose. I've heard about those three with the black testing swords just once, and it was alright. We can't celebrate without them being mentioned, I guess. “Your welcome, it was an honor,” I replied as I bowed at the waist.


A also bowed. “Many thanks, we had such an incredible experience.” The Frogadier crouched to the ground and pulled our Rescue Team bag open. I dropped down to stretch while he searched for the Reviver Seeds. I stood back up just as A held out the two yellow-beige seeds, spirals of green healing energy strong underneath the shells. Forcing me to waste such precious items and for what? These two are worse than the Team Sharp Claw from five years ago and then some. Can't trust Keepers to do anything.


We walked over to Hatchet and Rosario, and I grimaced as I stepped into something that didn't belong on the floor. For their sake I won't mention it. My only sympathy. Nevertheless I crushed the Reviver Seeds into the mouth of Hatchet and then Rosario.


Slowly, the Axew and the Pikachu stirred awake from their slumber and I stepped away, nearly crashing into A. The Frogadier squealed as my paw stamped on his foot. “Libra!”


“Sorry.” I tapped his shoulder.


With a cough, Rosario’s dark teal eyes fluttered open while Hatchet sat himself upright.


“Hey guys,” I said.


A held a hand over the two Pokemon’s shoulders. “We finally caught up. Are you okay?”


“What?” the Axew flinched. He staggered upright and fell against the wall for a moment.


The Pikachu beside him also moved away, only to stumble on the floor. “Who are you?”

“It’s me, Libra,” I explained and held out my striped League scarf and Gold-rank badge.

“And how could you guys forget me?” the Frogadier practically shoved his scarf and badge into Rosario and Hatchet’s faces.

Quick as the wind, I grabbed his arm and yanked it away. “You don’t have to do that-”

“Aquarius?” Rosario gasped.

A groaned and backed away. “To you not quite.” He fiddled with his bubbles before he pouted. “Eh whatever, yes we’re here and well, we evolved.”

Hatchet glanced over us and cowered down. “I can’t believe it.”

“What do you mean?” the Pikachu crossed their arms with a laugh. “Libra and Aqua -er A, were supposed to be this way; a Lucario and a Frogadier.”

I cleared my throat. “That’s not important right now. You two got knocked out by Master Zeraora.”

“You are in my very presence at this moment,” Master Zeraora said as they finally approached.

Borderline whimpering messes, Hatchet and Rosario shrunk even further against the wall.

“I’m disappointed in you guys,” A put, his voice lowering. “How hard was it to follow some fucking directions!?”

The Pikachu opened their mouth but I held my paw in front of them. “No, I don’t wanna hear anything. You’re Keepers,” I growled. “Rosario, all you had to do was secure the key and lock of mana that was right in your paws.”


“Hatchet, if you didn't know, you could have locked it back too!” the Frogadier shoved the Axew. “All Keepers can secure the keys and locks, it only has to be the same type of Pokémon and elemental key of mana for unlocking someone.”


I bit back a snarl before I spoke. “You point the key at the lock! Not at the ceiling, not at the wall, and certainly not at yourself!”


A slammed his foot down when Hatchet scooted to the side. “We also knew you kept on going on about ferals and how you don’t care about your Keeper responsibilities. When we go back to the League you are getting a referral.”

Rosario and Hatchet’s eyes widened. “How-”

“Silence!” I growled.

The Pikachu and the Axew jumped further against the wall, their aura spiraling.

“Master Zeraora didn’t even have to tell us,” I explained. “We just know; what other reason would make you behave in such ways?”

Out of nowhere, Master Zeraora placed a claw on my shoulder and I sighed. Almost scared the daylights outta me! Th ey then pointed toward the stairs. “Unfortunately I did have the displeasure of hearing all of their complaints, so yes, the Lucario and the Frogadier are correct.”


Rosario flinched while Hatchet fiddled with his claws.


“I shall give them the slightest credit, they protected the elemental key and lock from the clutches of Wicked Blow.”

As their cheeks flushed the Pikachu's ears folded. “Only barely.”

“Yes,” Master Zeraora said. “I am aware you two only won this encounter because you had the slightly strengthened power of boosted moves at your disposal.”

“They did?” The Frogadier questioned.

“This Pikachu and this Axew have been unlocked by a curious force, and a nefarious force.”

A curious and a nefarious force? What does that mean? “So they were unlocked?” I gasped. “I had a feeling something was off about them.”

“I knew ever since Flight and Talon, of the Sentinels Union mind you, told me,” Rosario sighed and waved a paw. “On a whim the Noctuowl and Dartrix took me through an Ether Shrine, and we found these cyan and magenta Ether Gems.”

“Fer Mew’s sake, I can’t be, I-” Hatchet clung onto his chest.

“Be quiet,” I barked, my throat raw.

Slowly, Master Zeraora blinked. “Only unlocked Keepers would be this sensitive in the presence of a key and lock of mana, especially one that corresponds with their elemental typing.”


A rubbed underneath his chin. “So that's why they freaked out even in the Mystery Dungeons below Needlemaw Peak.”


Instead of always having something to say, Hatchet and Rosario nodded.


“Do not think that being unlocked is an excuse for your behavior,” Master Zeraora roared. Their sky-blue eyes gleamed like daggers. “I have watched you from the moment you stepped onto clay colored soil, even before the Mystery Dungeons. Those with a firm heart and mind shall remain stalwart even with aggregates in their presence.” Master Zeraora paused for a moment. “Interference was only necessary once this Pikachu nearly acted out ignorantly! In all Mana Artifacts there are Gears of Mana, and they can be changed with just the pathetic will of a Pokémon and an Ether Gem they barely deserve.”


Barely deserve? They paused for a second, and slowly the air chilled bit by bit. In their left claw an object came into view. Small in their massive grasp, a yellow jagged lightning bolt shaped metallic key and a similarly designed lock. The elemental key and lock of electricity. Mana key and lock right before my eyes.


Master Zeraora snapped their claws and the Mana Artifacts disappeared from view. They slowly turned over to the side. “For such actions I should have slain you right where you stood!” Before I even blinked, both Hatchet and Rosario had three sharp claws, bristling with the might of a Myth pressing against their chests.


What in Volcanian's depths is going on?


“Help!” Rosario screamed, tears streaking down their face.


Hatchet wasn't much better, sobs wracked his body. “I'm sorry. I'm so sorry,” he pleaded.


Master Zeraora stood over them with both paws extended, each of their blade-like claws pressed into flesh and fur. Bright teal and yellow ripples of energy pulsed up and down their whole body, primed to strike.


This flood of aura pierced through my being and I dropped to the ground. Oppressive power overwhelmed my senses almost in full. “M-Master Zeraora please reconsider!” I begged, stumbling to rest on my knees.


“How shall I reevaluate this Pikachu and Axew?” they asked, their tone dripping in seething rage. “HOW?!”


A coughed as he staggered up to a knee as well. “Perhaps we could have the Chief of our League, McBone Stoutland, contact you in the following weeks Master Zeraora?”


They flickered an ear his way and scowled. “What shall I be receiving? Worthy enough to spare the ignorant, disrespectful, and asinine from my judgment?”


“A report of improvement, in the matters which displeased you the most. And continual advances in areas that you are satisfied in,” I added, my tail lodged firm in between my legs. Holy Volcanian, waters rush.


Master Zeraora let out a deep breath as they peered the four of us over. “I believe trust was placed into your League once.”


“I apologize deeply for their actions,” I cried. “They haven't learned proper protocol under direction of our Chief and Coordinator.”


“Especially in our short absence,” A said. “These two have had some troubling experiences recently, please forgive them.”


Their whiskers flickered as they slowly slouched. “I shall not give you a reminder of what happened, so I shall have to have frequent meetings and catch-ups with those who have eyes on you.”


“Yes Master Zeraora,” I replied, so quickly I almost bit my tongue.


As I flinched they smirked a tad bit. “Now do not believe this alone is adequate for such selfish actions: aiming to unlock oneself before securing the Mana Artifacts.”


“What do you desire Master Zeraora?!” A gasped as their claws sparked.


Master Zeraora leaned away and folded their arms behind their back. “What do I desire?” they asked back. Perhaps not a question for us to answer, but for them.


Hatchet and Rosario, now free from their massive claws, collapsed forward into stifled bouts of coughing and wheezing.


“Are you okay?!” I cried before I rushed toward them. They trembled in my arms, catching their breath gradually.


Rosario wiped their eyes and hacked up a bit of phlegm. “By Kyreum's frost no, not really.”


“No,” Hatchet sobbed. “This’s unbelievable.”


“I was never going to kill this Pikachu and Axew,” Master Zeraora sighed, and once again materialized the key and lock of mana.


A held on tight to the Axew and the Pikachu as they stood. “You weren't?” he gasped, before he added. “Master Zeraora?”


“No, by the will and oath of Leader Cresselia and Leader Darkrai I was sent to fearmonger good behavior among Keepers.”


I tilted my head.“The will of the Legendary Dream and Nightmare Leaders?”


“Chief McBone read a letter from them a few days ago, before we went to Scorpio Sands,” A reminded.


Master Zeraora grumbled, their fangs glistening with static. “Of course trying to misuse the artifacts in front of me is a serious offense and these two must be punished.”


“My apologies.” I bowed at the waist once again.


They placed the lock of electricity on the floor and then slotted the key of electricity inside, but didn't turn it. “I shall set the Gears of Mana inside to ‘Neutral’, this is compared to the ‘Futurist’ it once was. Also compared to the dangerous state ‘Primal’, the Pikachu almost changed it to,” they explained. “But not lock back this elemental key and lock of mana.”


So those are the names of a few of the states the Gears of Mana can go to. Leader Magearna mentioned a possible fourth though? I guess they don't even know it.


Rosario let out a deep breath as their aura flickered for a moment. “Thank you.”


State reset of the key and lock of mana alone, and they felt better? Incredible.


“Master Zeraora?'' The Frogadier held his scarf. “You are not going to reset all the unlocked electric-type Pokémon of this Hemisphere?”


“No.”


“I don't know much about this land,” Rosario ran a paw through their chest fur. “But I don't want to suffer through this ‘unlocked status’ anymore… Master Zeraora.”


If being unlocked is a sin that caused the Disruption then what is the point? How can being unlocked help the League? I sighed. “Forcing these two and many others, on our side, and the ones against us in Wicked Blow or otherwise, to stay unlocked is unfair Master Zeraora.”


“I have not asked for your opinion in this matter,” they growled. “Mana Artifacts are under my jurisdiction.”


My vision went blurry as I took a step back, paws out. I guess they partially blamed us for this. No, not us, but me. I'm always such a failure, even in front of a Myth of great power. “Master Zeraora, my apologies.”


Hatchet took in a shuddering breath, “I understand Master Zeraora. Please continue.”


“I believe you both can learn to control your unlocked powers, emotions, and sensitivities,” Master Zeraora said as they softened their tone, but it still chilled me. “Be aware of your overwhelming Keeper elemental-type presence, but I feel that you may find yourself in a situation soon that lets you focus on something else.”


Rosario held their paws together. “Just like trying to find my… My friends, I will try.”


“Perhaps you two shall be able to succeed like that one said.”


“That one Master Zeraora?” the Pikachu asked.


“I believe it is time for me to leave this Mana Temple and this Mystery Dungeon,” Master Zeraora said and stepped away. “There is another exit over this way.” Their claw tips pointed to the far corner of the mosque's inner prayer chamber, toward an ornate. laborate golden and silver doors, smaller than the set at the front of the Mana Temple.


Without another word, we gathered our bearings for a moment.

I flipped open one of our Adventure Guide books to a blank page. Then I filled it in with my charcoal pencil. ‘Mana Temple, at the top of Needlemaw Peak Mystery Dungeon, Floor 4. One dedicated to Legendaries: Groudon, Zygarde, and Landorus. Artifact Status: Present, Elemental key and lock of mana, Type: electricity. Custody: Pokémon of Myth, Master Zeraora.’

A glanced it over and flashed me a thumbs up. I closed the notebook and placed it down into the team bag gently. A clapped his hands “Alrighty let's get out of here.”

With the others trailing behind us we went towards the exit. Wonder when I'll see one of these places again. Hopefully soon it's my job as a Guardian to go there and help Keepers so it should be soon.

We all stepped out of the area and back and into the mountain.


“Once this Pikachu and Axew take down a Head Captain of Wicked Blow, and I receive a good word from your administrators and those you come in contact with, I will return with what I promised and much more,” Master Zeraora said.

What a hefty promise.


“Will I be able to lock the key and lock of electricity myself Master Zeraora?” the Pikachu asked, their dark teal eyes sparkling.


“By will of Leader Cresselia, Leader Darkrai, and Lady Arceus mayhaps,” they replied.


Lady Arceus? “Thank you Master Zeraora,” we said, Rosario and Hatchet even bowed this time.


“Let's really go,” A added.


Once we finally stepped into Needlemaw Peak’s sandy floor it happened in an instant. I fell a little, tumbling in my stride quickly. I glanced down to my arms and found two tiny spikes. “What? What just happened?”

“We're down again,” A remarked, in a higher more familiar- No, no, nonononono!

I gasped as my heart raced. Before us a dull yellow wave of energy pulsed toward the earth. My eyes widened as I glanced toward the floor. I was a Riolu once again and A was back to being a Froakie. “You cannot be for real!” I screamed.

Hatchet sighed as he glanced up over us. “Oh wow, y'all don't get to be bigger anymore.”

“Wow what a shame,” Rosario shook their head. “That sucks.”

“Why yes,” Master Zeraora held a claw back toward the sealed cavern. The Mana Temple was gone from view. Guess it's only one way in. “Unfortunately you two have devolved again.”

“How?” A cried, and ran a hand over the new dark blue markings on his shoulders and neck. “I mean I feel stronger, and am still at Frogadier height but why?”

“You are no longer in the presence of a Mana Temple. Thus you are not performing your duty as Guardians.”

“At least it didn't hurt,” I laughed with a grimace. My muscles flexed with each breath I took, and I ran a paw on my new patch of yellow and black fur.

“Wait a minute,” the Froakie below me gasped. In his hands held a longer, more cape-like collection of white bubbles. “Why didn't it hurt this time?”

“Because you have received your true power from the Mana Temple,” Master Zeraora said, “it can now be activated once you enter another Mana Temple again, thus no pain upon returning.” They then hurried ahead, into another room of the Mystery Dungeon.

Guess they got tired of us. “Yeah,” I sighed as I played with my extra small new tassels. “We can't stay like this forever.”

“Back to the League,” A groaned. “We’ve got lengthy reports to do, no thanks to you two.”

“Why are you acting like you're better than us?” Rosario asked, their half heart, half slanted tail twitching. “Like seriously, you care so much about all this Keeper stuff when you aren't even Keepers.

“That's just how League culture is,” I explained. “We all care about recovering and researching the Mana Artifacts, just like how we care about fighting Wicked Blow.”

A pointed to his badge. “The Disruption was caused by Sentinels and Keepers and important positions not doing their job,” he then glared at Rosario. “But the most important part was caused by Keepers.”

“And y’all are drilling that into us because?” The Axew crossed his arms.


“You two will join the League and will have work to do work on one of our Rescue Teams,” I said. “You should be prepared to be held accountable for all of your actions.”


“Yeah yeah I get it,” Rosario groaned. “Flight and Talon told me that-” The Pikachu's eyes narrowed. “Wait a minute, now that I think about it, how did you know about them?”


“Uh… We've met before.”


“But they're in the Sentinels Union. Also, why did you call me a pathetic human? I didn't even tell you.”


“You have the dark grey pattern on yur fur,” Hatchet called. “Just like Kobi does, it seems like all former humans do.”

Shoot, Leader Cresselia and Leader Darkrai told us all about your pasts, but not how to pull this off. I grimaced before I gave my response.“Sorry about that, really. You know how I said you don't have the right to judge me as a Sentinel? I don't really have the right to judge you as a Pokemon trainer either or as a human, even if you're a Pikachu now.”


“Really?”


“Yes. I'm sorry for losing my temper earlier after that Monster House,” I said, before I held out my paws. “I shouldn't have said that. Can you forgive me?”


“Sure, you didn't really answer the question though.”

“I’ll tell you later.” I waved them off, my ears folding.

“What?!” they groveled. “But I need to know! You're Pokémon…”


Hatchet, A, and I gave them a glare.


The Pikachu gripped their arm tight. “I mean in a good way! Please work with me here!”


I just shook my head and trudged forward. “We have to leave Needlemaw Peak and get back to Bristberg.”

“It won't exactly be easy,” A groaned into his small arms, hopping more and more to keep up.

Hatchet nodded. “Fine with me. I'm tired and need some rest.”

“Okay,” Rosario droned.

They and Hatchet fell in line behind me as we ventured through the sandy hallways. I held us higher up the Mystery Dungeon, my paws sore against the hardening stone. Eventually we made it out Needlemaw Peak. The massive clay, orange colored mountain range finally bested. I can't believe it. Right here in the Electro Sun Mountains, the elemental key and lock of mana was hiding just behind those walls. Ones carefully constructed and hidden via the ancients. Up Twistbolt Foot, up Brittlesand Sierra, lodged right up inside Needlemaw Peak.

We continued through the slightly twisting open air mountain pathways, all the while it seemed like those two were a bit comfortable. Like they forgot that they got us in this mess in the first place. So comfortable in fact, the Pikachu whistled. A long, ear-shattering melody, so high-pitched it nearly drove me insane.

“That’s really loud,” I said and gently nudged Rosario.

The Pikachu hummed before they stopped. “Sorry, forgot about the hearing.”

“How do you forget?” I sighed.

Hatchet chuckled, before he patted their shoulder. “Rosario just isn’t used to being a Pokemon yet, they’re acting just like Kobi when she first came here five years ago. Not a proper Domestic yet, little Stray.”


“Excuse me?”


“Ay!” The Froakie pushed the Axew to the side. “Don't forget, I remember what you said about us. Hatchet.”


“Sorry,” Hatchet held his claws close to his tusks. “I really shouldn't have said all that stuff ‘bout ferals.”


“And about Strays,” the Pikachu spat.


“The item shipments weren't even here in the first place. Billy- and, no. Billard and Clarence were wrong.”


“You'd say all sorts of awful things on the hunch of that?” A yelled. “Do you even know the name of the Rescue Team you are supposed to be joining?”

“Got no clue… I just got a letter tellin’ me ta come to the Bristberg League from a ‘Committee’ or else.”

“It’s Sharp Claw,” I explained. “Do you know who's on that Rescue Team?”


The Axew counted on his claws before he shook his head. “No I do not.”


“What do you think they would do if they saw you?” The Froakie asked.


“You know they are over there, working hard,” I growled, as my ears flattened. “And you took away their chance to recover some Mana Artifacts.”


“Well uh-”


The entire mountain side we were beside rumbled. It seemed especially brittle and I wasn't exactly sure what was happening.


“I don't know,” Hatchet said and rubbed the back of his head. “I hope they won't be too mad.”


“What about you Rosario?”


“I'm sorry,” the Pikachu mumbled. "For my friends I need to do better, I just don't know and-” The rocks shook again, the strong rumbling from the outside.


“What is going on?” Mana rushed into my whole body, my eyes wide.

“The mountain’s collapsing!” A shouted.


I pulled Rosario and Hatchet behind me as my tassels flared. Aura ! “What?!”


Large pieces of stone scattered about fell around us. Light from outside the Mystery Dungeon, bathing us and its warm glow despite the setting sun. “How did this happen?” A called through the cloud of dust.


Slowly it parted and I noticed three oddly familiar auras. Pokémon did this. The source of it all, three small figures.


Once they caught sight of us, one pulled out a huge bladed object. The three pointed boomerang thing was massive, much taller than the three Pokémon.

Are they brigands? Aura flooded to my paws. “Who are you-”


“Wait a second!” Hatchet yelped as he pointed a claw forward.


It's still dusty! I grumbled as I stared at them closer. The three Pokémon had on gear; scarves, and bags. Could still be Wicked Blow.


“Hold it!” one of them shouted.


More of the dust cleared and I saw the three striped League scarves and badges on them. Light blue, dark green, and grey: Bristberg League! They were a Treecko, a Charmander and a Totodile. “These guys are Team Sharp Claw!?” I gasped and nearly fell over.


“Team Blue Heroes! Why are you guys here?” Linus shouted. “Hatchet?”


“Linus?” the Axew shot toward him, as fast as he could.


“Can't believe my freaking eyes!” the Totodile cheered. “Libra, A-san, you guys look a little different.”


The Charmander shot out a jet of steam and they jumped up and down. “Isn't it crazy how we met you here?”


A laughed as he walked over to the three. “Yeah that's wild!”


“Why did you guys fall?” I asked.

The Treecko pried himself off his brother, with a smile. “This glaive kept on shakin’ as we got closer to you all.”


“And he bashed it into the wall to see if this was a shortcut,” Glade laughed before she swiped it from his grasp. “I'll do it better next time!”


I tilted my head. “Shortcut?”

“Linus said that we should split up from the others to check it out,” Nevada added.

“Oh my!” Master Zeraora's voice echoed out from the pathway before us.


Nevada flinched and held onto Linus. “Who?”


In a flash, Master Zeraora shot over behind us. I thought they'd left, Holy Lugia! They approached Team Sharp Claw and held their claws towards the three bladed weapon lying on the floor. It had holes shaped like Ether Gems in its ‘handles’, how interesting. “You have one of the Mana Regalia!”


“Wait?” the Charmander gasped, as Glade held onto their arm. Linus grabbed their other claw.

“Is that Master Zeraora!?” The three yelled.


“Yes,” they replied, ears low. “Greetings Fangs of the Fallen.”


“You wish to speak with us?” I stepped in front of them.

“I will keep things brief.” Master Zeraora nodded. "You three are performing your duties as Sentinels very well. Thank you for your service in the Wei Region with my child.”


Team Sharp Claw bowed their heads. “It was an honor Master Zeraora.”


“Regardless, you have one of the Mana Regalia, which can help solve the Disruption by returning stolen mana to the land from unlocked Keepers, like this Pikachu and Axew.”

Linus's eyes widened. “That’s why the glaive was drawn to that Starmie on the way to New Withered Savannah and even here?”

“Hatchet and… Whoever that is, are freaking unlocked?!” Glade shouted.

“I’m not a ‘whoever that is’ you idiot!” Rosario shot back.


“Then who the voids are you-”

“Shut up!” I roared. The Totodile and the Pikachu were quiet as red fighting-type mana swirled around my fists. Even Master Zeraora went silent. “Oh.” Warmth flushed my muzzle as my eyes gazed over their figure. “My apologies.”


“Do not fret, however you and your League companions must complete my mission if you wish to secure this.” They held up the key and lock of electricity. Still as beautiful as the first time I saw it, a real bonafide Mana Artifact. “Defeat a Head Captain of Wicked Blow and conduct proper behavior.”

“There’s an elemental key and lock of mana here?” Glade gasped.

Nevada’s tail flame shot out as they shook her shoulders. “That means there’s probably a Mana Temple too!”

Master Zeraora cleared their throat. “I believe I've seen all I need to.”

“You have?” A asked, his orange eyes wide.


“Farewell.” Master Zeraora clapped their claws and launched up through the hole in the mountain in a teal blur of light. Such speed ! Just as fast as they came, they were gone.

“Farewell?” I waved. I glanced back to Team Sharp Claw. What was previously four of us was now seven. Was it right to get Wei Forest vibes now?


Linus tapped my arm.“What happened in those Mystery Dungeons?”


“You can ask later,” I groaned. “We need to go to Bristberg.”

“Could some of our team do reconnaissance? We did some back in New Withered Savannah so we figured we could do some here too.”

A sighed as Rosario and Hatchet fidgeted. “We don't have that much time, but if you hurry.”


“Sure thang.”


“Let me call Chief McBone, now that we’re leaving. Got a lot to report.” I rummaged through the team bag and pulled out a large blue ball. The Connection Orb would be much faster than my badge. And with Team Sharp Claw here, mentioning ‘the others’, time was of the essence. We've got quite the work to do, and we're not even close to finished.


Note
And in Interlude fashion we change how the POVs function. We are dropping down to just two POVs: Linus and Kobi.​
 
Chapter 26- Part 1 Settling Dust

Kiba Makuro

Junior Trainer
Pronouns
He/Him, They/Them
Originally Posted September 21st, 2024
Ported October 15th, 2024

Chapter Summary
Kobi and the others try to reconvene and cheer up after Marshadow's attack. They go to the final seminar but what else is waiting alongside the new developments in the Rehabilitation?

Kobi Espurr's POV


Morning at the Moonlight Hotel came like it usually did. However, after that attempt on our lives, I'm surprised it did. The toll yesterday took on Makkuro, Master Fang, and Master Hunter was immense, but what was even greater was the suffering that Doran went through. He probably believed it was all his fault.

Even if it's for something stupid, I couldn’t help but feel the same way, but for a different reason. This trip to Saltwater Cliffs became a nightmare so quickly, and my tongue didn't help at all.

Master Fang wasn’t in our hotel room. The Lycanroc was probably out getting ready for another busy day, so it was fine.

As I glanced at Master Hunter in this oddly silent morning, the Boltund's iris shrank. They looked away from me as they gathered some items in their saddle bag. Instead of completely avoiding me however, she approached. Ears and tail low, sadness?

“Morning Kobi,” the Boltund said, before they cleared their throat. That ever same Hoennian and Kantoian mix of an accent was pleasant on the ears.

I turned away from her yellow-green eyes and nodded. “Good Morning Master Hunter.” My reaction to finding out that one of her partners, Kuroshi, a Hisuian Arcanine, was a former human hadn’t been best. And my follow-up response to the knowledge that it was Wicked Blow, the Committee, and some other group of Pokémon that killed him and many of Team Vanguard was tantamount to pure rubbish.

Like why in the blazes did I say ‘Fuck’ to that. Really? Was that all I had?

Master Hunter finally got my attention again with a cough. “I'd like to apologize for my outburst yesterday, it was rude of me. Unprofessional as well.”

With a grimace, I met her gaze once again. “I-”

I apologize for our behavior Master Hunter,” a voice, Doran's cut me off.

What? As much as I tried to stop it, confusion marred my face.

“Our unlocked Keeper presences put so much pressure, figuratively and literally, on you and Master Fang,” the Kubfu continued, his witty tone deepening.

“Thank you very much, Doran,” Master Hunter replied. “I’m still sorry about yesterday. Of course, all of that is what Fang and I signed up for when we took all of you into our care. You three aren't burdens, especially dealing with so much.”

None of us here chose to be unlocked. To have a part in causing or continuing the Disruption with our every breath. Not even Master Hunter and Master Fang. I wonder when they were unlocked?

“Uh, Morning,” another voice- Makkuro's, called out weakly. The Rockruff made his way over with hesitant steps, staring between us.

“Good morning Makkuro,” Master Hunter said in a gentle bark, their tail wagging.Must be the Rockruff bias, scoring slight favors.

Makkuro took a deep breath before he spoke. “I’m sorry too. I don’t know what’s been up with me lately, but I’ll respect your boundaries to the best of my abilities.”

I shook my head and got in between everyone. The three other Pokémon tilted their heads, muzzles of varying lengths all in different shades of confusion. “You all shouldn't have to do all the heavy liftin’,” I explained. “You and I are a Dream Mark pair. Grow and learn from each other, by the will of Leader Cresselia and Leader Darkrai.”

Makkuro's eyes traced the floor as he sighed.“ A pair, Kobi.”

“What?”

“You can't handle it all either, we're in this together.” He paused as his tone wavered. “...But I feel bad.”

It's a partnership. I followed his gaze for a moment before I turned away with my question. “Why’s that?”

“I still haven’t controlled my moves’ strength despite our training.”

“This takes time, Makkuro,” the Boltund across from us sighed. “Kobi, you also shouldn't feel burdened.”

“It's hard,” I cried out, my body deflating. Makkuro and I've learned but we haven't done anything to help the Disruption with our own paws yet.

“Ay Tapu,” the Rockruff groaned as they stretched. “Our attempt to train yesterday did get interrupted, I guess. We'll have a fresh start today.”

Master Hunter chuckled a bit.“That's more like it.”

I shook my head. “But I have more experience and they're ma Dream Mark, it isn't right for me ta be slackin’.”

Doran smirked that same incorrigible smirk. “Yer accents slippin’ Cold Crown.”

“You never explained what a ‘Cold Crown’ is, Doran.” Master Hunter added before they blinked between us.

Makkuro groaned an uneasy breath.“Just one of Doran's unfunny jokes.”

“You call where Ca- another great one, was first spotted a joke?”

Not the Calyrex mention. Doran always talked about Crown Tundra, Galar, where I was from. A growl rumbled through my throat. Could Doran not mention anything from the world of Pokémon Trainers for one day? “Can someone get him to stay his maw?”

“Today's a day I'm going by they.”

A couple of sighs rang out in the room like harrowed, tired bells.

Master Hunter rubbed their paw against their muzzle.“I think we should get some breakfast.”

“Agreed.”

As it turns out, that wish was a command, and the four of us ended up in the Moonlight Hotel’s dining hall. Because this building catered to the average Pokémon, it had to be large, no, massive. Tables, chairs and stools of various sizes occupied the center, whereas the outskirts of the hall were lined with sofas, and what looked like nests.

Toward the back table stood Master Fang, with an interesting device on their sides. Some sort of metal tray, basket-like contraption. On it sat various plates, food piled on top. Pancakes, dumplings of some sort, and eggs of all types. Besides that there were berries large and small, muffins, and breads. All in that basket.I guess that's how a quadruped Pokémon could carry a few dishes by themselves, still looked cumbersome. “Morning all,” the Lycanroc greeted, their blue eyes full of vibrant warmth.

“Hi darling,” Master Hunter replied, their tongue peeking out of their maw. “Is everything ready?”

Master Fang shook their head as they gestured toward a large square table, one low to the ground. “Almost.”

My stomach growled and a whine slipped out my throat. The others' eyes drifted toward me. “Almost?”

“Just in time!” a familiar peppy voice called around the corner and Fist, along with Pride and their apprentices entered the dining room.

“We know you had a stressful time yesterday, so we thought this would cheer you up before the last big meeting!” Pride added and gestured to Smeargle, or Kehinde, Morpeko, Aron, and Impidimp.

But they weren't alone, that same mouth watering scent of buttery, flaky-

“Alright over there Kobi?” Doran's elbow gently rubbed my shoulder.

Fist had a box full of pastries from that wonderful store beside the Black Castle. My once hated Espurr nose picked up the scent of biscuits, crepes, donuts, and cookies. All for… I snapped back to the others as a bit of drool trickled down my maw. My cheeks warmed with a flush and I nodded.

“We don't have too long before the event starts so let's dig in!” Master Fang cheered as they sat down on one of the cushions, that cumbersome contraption now gone.

“Ah yeah!” We all yelled back, some of our calls louder than others.

A Ledian hotel staffer glanced our way from the kitchen. He pointed to the collection of chairs, cushions and sofas behind us: even though it was only a little, there were a few other customers here this morning. Who shot glares our way. Drat. Pride, and the Boltund across from her quickly padded over to the other guests. The Pyroar bowed her head as she apologized profusely to a Dewgong. “My sincerest apologies for our loudness-”

“No it's okay.”

“But it really isn't.”

“I understand youth sports and the like.”

Youth sports huh? “No but-”

All the while, Master Hunter offered the others some of our meal and before they left, and set the probable leftovers on another large table.

Makkuro, Doran, Master Hunter, and I sat in a semi-circle around Master Fang with generous helpings of food on our bowls and plates thanks to the Primeape on the other side. I was ever grateful in her hands.

“Enjoying your meal this time?” the Lycanroc asked.

Doran pumped their fist and cheered. “Yeah!”

“Really now Doran?” Makkuro questioned before he took a couple of slow sips. I'd call them laps, but he still tried to act like a human even as a Rockruff.

The Kubfu nodded.“Anything's better than the grub I had scavengin’.”

“Oh right,” I gasped through a maw full of berries. While I lived in Hunter's Plains with my Meowstic and Espeon parents and then with Hatchet and Linus's family, Doran was a wandering vagrant.

All alone, for seven years. Well that can't be true, they just haven't told us more of their past yet.

The Kubfu gingerly took a forkful of eggs and berries into their maw and chewed, their rich brown eyes… Why did I look so hard? They stared at the Lycanroc and Boltund. “Thank you, Master Hunter, Master Fang.”

Both sets of ears perked up to the mention, with the Boltund first to reply. “You're quite welcome, though I didn't plan this.”

“Fist and I did,” the Lycanroc explained, a frown soon growing on their muzzle. “Last night after, well.”

Their bodies turned away, all went toward me. For Zamazenta’s sake, why.

“I'm sorry for not helping calm down Hunter,” Master Fang said, a rattle in their throat. “I didn't realize telling you guys about our family and kids would be a sensitive subject.”

“Once again, I shouldn't have let my feelings out with my presence,” Master Hunter sighed.

“We have our monitoring bands so it's fine, right?” Doran asked.

“Wrong,” the Boltund chided, from what I can tell mostly at herself.

The next question was another simple one. “Wrong?”

“Yes. Anyways, Doran I'm glad you're actually feeling better,” Master Fang said, turning away slightly.

“Actually?”

Master Hunter nodded.“Yeah, you were putting on a mask yesterday. Am I correct?”

“You've caught me.” The Kubfu's massive eyebrows twitched as the two Pokémon focused on them.

“For Kobi and Makkuro's sake, you don't need to do that.”

“Huh?” the Rockruff gasped.

Why me?

“Well-”

I couldn’t continue listening and dug into some cinnamon buns. Why did I have to ruin the moment again and again?

It's not even about me. This always happens, first with Hatchet and his asshole cousins, and now with Doran and with Master Hunter's family life. Within this world I can only pretend to fit in. Different time, different place, same meddling Espurr who can't-

“You want some more waffles, Kobi?”

I peered up from my nearly empty plate and noticed Fist. She had a few warm pieces in hand, basically dangling in front of my face. This Primeape… Really cared. “You're sharin’ with me?”

“The Sentinels Union has gotta stick together, Kobi!” Fist replied, a grin bright on her face. “Even with our differences, we can't help it if we make mistakes every once and a while.”

I took a bite of the waffle and grabbed a Razz berry. “Yeah, because of our differences. We're stronger together.”

“All to end the Disruption,” Pride added.

The Primeape clapped her hands gently as a smile lit up her face.“Another branch found a lead on where an elemental key and lock of mana is, but we've got quite a few Mystery Dungeons nearby to search.”

“Really?” I asked, my eyes widening.

“It could be soon.”

My tail thrashed. “I might get a chance to see a mana artifact!?” I set out on this trip and now we're finally making progress!

“Enough about that!” Makkuro put another pastry onto my plate.

I glanced back toward the food and noticed the rapidly lowering sweet supply. “Huh?”

Smeargle laughed as she held up a Rawst and Bluk berry crepe. “While you were chatting, we were snacking!”

With a grunt, I shoved a tiny chocolate-chip filled pancake into my maw and continued eating. Normally, this many breaded foods was bad for one’s health, but these? Packed with so many fruits and proteins that it hardly tasted sweet... Humans couldn't figure out how to make these taste good but here Pokémon made do.

Soon we were finished with our meal, and our two groups went back to our rooms. When we got ready to go to Leader Magearna's Domain and outside the hotel in general, Doran stayed out of my fur for once. and was oddly silent. I could never tell what they're thinking, that strange Kubfu. Unpredictability is more of a former human trait I supposed.

I'd say the trip back but since Marshadow attacked us, and our sensitive conversations it was quite tense.

From being less than about a half hour's walk from the outskirts of Saltwater Cliffs, Leader Magearna made an interesting decision to have their hideout down here. A shiver rolled down my spine as we continued further down the solemn path. It was cold. The early morning overcast skies and rain made it just as chilly as yesterday.

Unfortunately, the staffers all but swarmed us once we made it back to the boundary of the empty' stoneland. “Defender Hunter!” a Rhydon yelled as he charged straight at us with a Zebstrika, a Medicham, and a Cacturne.The Rhydon tightened his pink and silver scarf as he stared down at us alongside his fellow staffers, it looked like we weren't going in the elevator without a little chat or two.

With a slight sigh, the Boltund stepped forward out of the group.“My sincerest apologies, on my presence fluctuation.”

The Medicham scowled as he gestured to his forehead. He had that same familiar silver plated band on top.“Even if it was only for 0.01 seconds,” he all but spat, “it was enough to send an alarming signal through your monitoring band.”

“I am truly sorry.” Master Hunter bowed her head toward the ground.

“Now this is dismissing the attacks of Marshadow,” the Cacturne said as she waved her spiny arm. “How are you all faring?”

“Personally I am doing well,” Master Fang said, their ears lowering. “Though I did faint from my previous injuries.”

The rest of us gave similar responses, I tried keeping mine as short as possible. Lest they mind my dark grey fur any longer than necessary. These staffers probably knew who the former humans were but I still wanted to pretend no one knew, pretend I wasn't special.

“That is true,” Rhydon sighed as he held his arms behind his back. “Young Master Doran was particularly targeted as a Kubfu.”

I winced as I thought of Smeargle and Morpeko's comments from yesterday. Even these staff guys are calling them Young Master?

“Since you inquired, I am also well,” Doran finally spoke up, their tail low.

The Cacturne smiled softly before she replied. “Very well, Young Master and the Kubfu's charges are in good spirits.”

“You also had the pleasure of meeting with both our honorable Leader Magearna and the talented Young Master Xuě Zeraora,” the Medicham added, his tone calmer. “Some of you, sans the Primeape Vanguard and the Pyroar Caster are unlocked Keepers, so continue to be mindful of your elemental presence.”

My eyes widened and I turned over to Fist and Pride, on their muzzles a look of surprise. Wait what, those two aren't? No wonder it was so easy to be around them, they're Sentinels.

The Zebstrika huffed as he trotted around us, particularly eyeing me and Doran before he turned back to Master Hunter. “Please control yourselves as you have access to our sacred realm, the Domain of the honorable Leader Magearna.”

“Yes, once again my apologies,” the ever remorseful Boltund repeated.

After the staffers left through the permanent mist shrouding the perimeter of hidden lands I let out a breath. Well rather a sigh of relief. The first couple times we came to Leader Magearna's Domain it was quite rough, but now we had even more pressure.

The earth rumbled and soon emerged the familiar pink form of a large eight-spoked gear. We all got into the elevator and the same elevator operator from the first day, Poliwrath, let us down into the depths of Leader Magearna's Domain. It seems like today is the last day of the seminar, so it's a bit of a shame we won't be here much longer. The technology here was so cool compared to anywhere else I've been.

Eventually we of the Sentinels Union, branch Numero Seis, six out of fourteen sat down beside everyone else in the massive auditorium. It's so crazy that in a room of regular League, Sentinels Union, and Expedition Society Pokémon in the front were the VIPs. Shifu Yang and Shifu Shui, Young Master Xuě, and unexpectedly Master Zeraora. They finally made it here on the last day?

Leader Magearna walked up onto the stage with that same trio of Meowscarada, Skeledirge, and Quaquaval, from that incredible Fleur Cannon earlier I finally understood a Legendary's true power. They saved our lives alongside Young Master Xuě. The fact that Marshadow was alive also showed me Leader Magearna's restraint.

“Greetings from all across the land, close and far,” Leader Magearna's booming, staticky voice rang aloud. Once again, amazing acoustics from just a Skeledirge's birdy mic, Exploud head speakers and Oranguru's telekinesis link.

“Let us continue our seminar on how to permanently end the Disruption, this involves security of the elemental keys and locks of mana of each type.” Leader Magearna explained and the walls flashed with a diagram of all eighteen keys. “Which naturally requires them to be locked back up, which in turn the reversal of all those unlocked, especially the Keepers of the Celestial Hemisphere.”

The chart swapped to a map of the five Continents on this Hemisphere. “The Disruption was caused by unlocking hundreds of thousands of them, so the shift in the global supply, or balance of mana would be felt by all Pokémon,” Leader Magearna paused before they held their hand out. “But we have to aim higher, not just ending the ‘current’ Disruption.”

I tilted my head in confusion. The current? Was there ever another one?

Leader Magearna clapped their hands and the lights on the wall rearranged themselves into four different colored gears. One cyan, one magenta, one green, and one red. Just like the Ether Gems.“We can prevent Disruption for all eternity. The elemental keys and locks of mana, along with all mana artifacts, have the Gears of Mana within them. These Gears of Mana have four states that I previously mentioned; Neutral, Futurist, Primal, and an elusive fourth state, still unknown at the moment.”

Even the Legendary Leader Magearna hasn't found the fourth state? Aren't the Gears of Mana what they made? Or was it made by that ‘Original’ Magearna mentioned?

“We have uncovered that the Primal state was not only the first state of all the Gears of Mana, which means that every elemental key and lock of mana were Primal but also this is the state that they need to be in to prevent a Disruption from happening again,” Leader Magearna said, and moved toward the left side of the stage.

Master Fang nodded along and a thought popped into my head. That's right, the Gears of Mana were changed to Futurist a long time ago, but by who and by what?

With a new symbol on the wall, a triangular badge Leader Magearna began their lecture once more.“Team Vanguard, in that same research paper ‘Understanding Our Mana World’ discovered that hidden away in a mana scroll is a possible method to permanently keep all the Gears of Mana in the elemental keys and locks of mana in Primal Form. This will permanently limit the powers of these Mana Artifacts and technically destroy them.”

My eyes widened as I held back a gasp. Destroy the elemental keys and locks of mana?! Don't we need those to keep the balance of mana? Or could we find another way?

“This potential was too dangerous for the ones who bind those in the League like Rescue Team Vanguard. Our true enemies used propaganda to send legions of death after those brave fourteen Pokémon!” they shouted throughout the auditorium. “Even forces for so-called good. All of this violence on the basis of ruining the sanctity of Keepers and Sentinels way of life, a life that shouldn't exist with such inequality and inequity.”

Shite, if these guys are such a big deal why haven't I heard of them before? Are they related to that cult that started the Great Betrayal, attacking the former humans of Team Checkmate? Team Checkmate was the Rescue Team of the Chief and Coordinator of the Bristberg League. If I recalled correctly. Chaos from the legions of Wicked Blow gangs was always our focus.

“Even though only one of Myth and Legend such as myself, Zeraora, Shui and Yang can open the mana scrolls with enough Ether Gems, anyone can find one and alert us to the location. Keeper or Sentinel.”

Mana scrolls were almost useless without being open eh. Doran could probably open one too right?

“Take pride Sentinels, for your clairvoyance,” Leader Magearna clarified, their voice softening. “In lack of Keeper presence is a great aid in recovering both the Ether Gems, Mana Regalia, and mana scrolls.”

They then gestured back to the wall and the four black circles on it.“Speaking of Mana Regalia, we have finally gleaned some new information on them. Specifically four located on the Constellation Continent: the Treasure of the Tapus, a pair of glaives, the Greatshield, a wide broadsword, the Feathers of Light, a bow and arrow, and the Sacred Cleaver, a mighty handaxe.”

Doran suppressed a yawn and leaned toward me, their paw brushing my shoulder. If they didn't touch me I'd forget they were there, imagine looking for a mana artifact. The Treasure of the Tapus was definitely in either Tapu Plains or Tapu Valley, but I've no clue where any of the others could be. Kinda nerve-wracking to think one could be in Saltwater Cliffs or just lost in the middle of the straylands somewhere.

“When used by a Sentinel, particularly the few Fangs of the Fallen, the Mana Regalia can help reset the balance of mana, but only when used against an unlocked Keeper. Sentinels do not gain major strength from the basic Mana Regalia, but there are ways to become equal to an unlocked Keeper's boosted move.”

There is? The image of Linus or any other little Sentinel running around with a giant sword, the size of their body lit up in my head and I grinned.

“The Penultimate Mana Regalia can take back unlocked Keepers power and let a Fang of the Fallen channel it much stronger through the weapon instead of their body,” as Leader Magearna spoke, different weapons and vague Pokémon forms- like the statues in a Kanto Gym, moved on the wall. “When the Mana Regalia is used as a conduit the negative effects such as rage and instability of being unlocked are not present.”

“Now you may be asking how this could be, but do understand the Penultimate Mana Regalia are just like any other mana artifact, they have Gears of Mana. These Gears of Mana however are permanently in their Primal Form. A Pair of Scythes, a Great Bow, a Wakuzaki and a Halberd are reported to be the Penultimate Mana Regalia, the whereabouts seem to be somewhere on the Nebula, Jovian, and Twin-Star Continents, along with many other Mana Regalia.”

If we studied those Penultimate ones... Could we get the Gears of Mana inside all Mana Artifacts to be permanently Primal? Woah that's incredible, we have so many things to go after!

“If you are a Keeper do not fret, these are just more tools for ending the Disruption, and defeat the carefully hidden Eternal Federation.Together Keepers, Sentinels, those of Myth and Legend, we shall keep moving onward, the gears of change interlinked in unison. No matter what may come!” Leader Magearna all but ordered.

Master Hunter and Master Fang climbed out of their seats. I, and many others followed as pure fairy energy, pixelated warmth filled the room.“We fight for everyone's future, one free from the eternal clutches of despair and from the Disruption!”

Cheers, clapping, stomping, and other sounds of excitement and joy rang out in the auditorium and Leader Magearna bowed to a standing ovation of several minutes. Pokémon of all sizes and types, from all across the Hemisphere, in various Mana Research Leagues, Expedition Societies, and Sentinels Union Branches all united.

I've only lived in this world of Mysterious Dungeons for five years but I have never felt such a connection, and belonging, from so many lives. Fist and Pride cheered, Makkuro, and Doran were all excited, and even Smeargle, and Morpeko looked happy alongside Aron and Impidimp. Eventually, with their combined effort, Leader Magearna's staffers got each row to calm down, and exit one by one.

Once we were out in the lobby of the auditorium each organization was set in lines to have all their belongings checked and took off our monitoring bands.

Master Fang wagged their tail as they sat on the ground for a moment, their black Sentinels Union beads shining bright off the room lights. “So what did you all think?”

“That seminar was fantastic!” I cheered back, earning a nudge from Makkuro and Doran.

“So much information,” the Kubfu groaned, rocking on their heels.

“Yeah,” Makkuro sighed. “Too much really.”

“You three begged us to take you to Saltwater Cliffs to learn and now you're whining?” the Lycanroc softly laughed.

“Three!?” I gasped.

“Yes, you three!”

The Rockruff across from them nodded, “We Keepers have a ton of work to do.”

“It's all to help Pokémon remember,” I tried to ease the tension. “It's what your friends back home would want.” Those Pokémon that the Ace Trainers Academy had them use when in Johto due to the ban of their five Alolan Pokémon.

“Knowledge is a great power in these times,” Master Hunter finally spoke up, their voice a tad shaky.

I glanced into the Boltund's tired eyes; their former Rescue Teams research was instrumental in yet another breakthrough, but it couldn't stop the tragedy of Team Vanguard. Those drained yellow-green eyes haunted me even as I looked away.

Makkuro sniffled as he lifted his head up. “Yeah, for those guys I'll do my best. I helped them in your stead, Doran.”

Doran brushed some of their fur before they spoke, “Thanks for that Makkuro, perhaps I was too… Too mischievous with you.”

I furrowed my brow. ‘Mischievous’ was what they called that teasing?

“You were a bit too much,” he grumbled softly.

The Kubfu ruffled the dark gray strands of fur on Makkuro's head. He leaned away as they spoke. “But you're someone important to me.”

“We're learning,” I added. “And we need to get stronger as well.” Stronger in mind and stronger in body.

Eventually the line made its way to the front of the security staff. The Gallade from before berated Master Hunter, and a few other Pokémon for sending worrisome signals. On the contrary the Emboar and Empoleon staffers, ones that were here on the first day, gave us a large wooden crate. Apparently it was a care package.

The Emboar bowed as he held out the box. “Thank you for your valiant effort against Marshadow with Young Master Doran!”

“Please take care,” the Empoleon added, and latched the care package onto Master Fang's bags.

We got our belongings back but soon came the difficult part, the metal lined collar which kept my senses dulled was taken off. A headache from the tension slowly brewed as the staffers took off the monitoring bands from the rest of the unlocked Keepers and Sentinels. Apparently there were a few of them. A shudder of pain rolled throughout my head, more and more unlocked presences, from all sorts of elemental types I've never tasted so strongly before flooded my head. All consuming smoke, mint, whey, bitter herbs, and the earth itself. All from Keepers.

“Too much!” I croaked as the figures of Doran and Makkuro went blurry. My paws trembled as the various presences fluctuated in a wild current, all reactions to each being freed.

“Kobi?” the Rockruff barked, their tone baked with worry, just as murky as their brown body. How was he fine? Why am I the only one to suffer ?

“Let's go,” Master Hunter said before she picked me up by the scruff of my neck and pulled me up.

“Thanks,” I croaked, as I slumped over.

“Keep it together mate!” Doran yelped, as they grabbed one of my paws.The warmth and contact eased the pangs in my gut just for a moment and I felt like I could stay awake.

“Remember the steps to controlling your moves, it works for resistance too,” Master Fang's gentle voice let me visualize the forms in front of me. “Peace, those you love, cherish them in your heart.”

Through the hurried steps, we made our way back to the elevators to the surface. Hushed whispers were also present amongst the chatter of the other Pokémon around us, the noises almost overwhelming. Such a ridiculous position to be in. I felt like a bloody toddler, a focking baby. I wasn't a baby, er hatchling, being carried like this, I was an unwell adult. A weak pathetic Espurr adult at that. Stupid Disruption, I should be a bloody Meowstic by now for sword's sake.

The gentle, rattling sounds of a pitter patter drummed above my ears and I sighed. It was raining once again. By the time my eyes properly worked I was on a bench in the middle of Saltwater Cliffs. The slight acrid brine of salt flitted into my nose as I took a deep breath and rolled over. “Ow!”

I rolled right into Makkuro, the Rockruff's neck pebble pieces sharper than I expected. “Kobi!” he cheered, careful with his paws as he stood up.

“You're up now eh Kobi?” Doran asked and leaned down to ruffle my fur.

Their paws were so soft, but this was definitely an awkward sight. The Kubfu stared at me for a while, like they weren't sure I was awake. A blush tinged my cheeks as I righted myself and replied. “Yeah.”

Master Hunter, and Master Fang stood in front of the bench, out of the covering and into the drizzling shower. But because of them no one saw my pitiful body. One laggard, like a drunk hungover off Oran wine in broad daylight, er day. It was always cloudy here in Saltwater Cliffs, wasn't it.

“That's good to hear,” the Boltund sighed before she shivered. “You were out for only a few minutes but that was worrying to say the least.”

The Lycanroc beside her shook their head. “Atta girl Kobi, back on your paws. We've got another meeting to head to so it's just in time.”

“With who?” I asked, and stretched my legs out, finally getting a taste of the rain as it trickled out. Refreshing after being caked in so many different Keepers presences, unlocked or not.

“The other representatives from the Sentinels Union. From the other Continents, too.”

“Where is the meeting?”

“At the Elite Phase Inn Suite, some really luxurious hotel apparently,” the Boltund noted, her eyes aimed at the skyline for a moment.

Master Fang pointed toward the bakery and took a couple of steps away. “It's also unfortunately on the other side of the city.”

“Come on now,” Master Hunter said and nudged their fiancée, slowing them down. “There will be some very important guests so it's best not to keep them waiting.”

Instead of going down the street with the Grand Keep, that Black Castle, we went into a different part of the city. Sea shells and old coins still paved the ground, but the buildings themselves had far more modern sleek exteriors, bright signage and brighter colors. Vividly painted by warm reds, greens, and yellows compared to the cool blues, purples, and grays of the previous district.

Doran hummed a song as we walked past a brewery. I could remember some of the lyrics:‘One for sword and shield, and one for ice and ghast, and all~’ a Wydon City Gym theme from a couple years back. That reminded me; they had family in Galar and Johto. So why did they ask about the Urshifu?

I glanced at the shops beside us and took a chance. “Hey Doran, why did you ask Shifu Yang and Shifu Shui if they or their family knew you?” I asked.

Doran groaned as they rubbed their temples.“I didn't really want to talk about this all of a sudden but, Leader Cresselia and Leader Darkrai told me that a Single Strike and Rapid Strike Urshifu pair, one found here, in the Constellation Continent, would be some of my family members.”

“Is that so?” Master Hunter pondered aloud.

The Lycanroc beside them shifted their gait with their question.“Maybe they just haven't reached the Continent yet?”

“I've got no clue honestly,” the Kubfu groaned once again, their tiny round ears flattened.

“Or you missed them somehow?” I added.

Makkuro hummed. “Who could that be, a pair of Urshifu not related or under Shifu Yang and Shifu Shui?”

“That's a good question, a good question.”

We shook our heads as we continued onward through the sea-shell lined streets, and passed another castle. This one was a light grey beauty, bedazzled with blue stained glass and white gates with a metal finish. Beside it a bronze plate read ‘Captain Palifin’ Fort. And that wasn't all Saltwater Cliffs had to show, right next door had a few tourist traps, Saltwater Taffy, Salt Cliff Crisps and Bakery, the doors wide open, a huge crowd of mon waiting outside.

Master Fang led us to an intersection with some warehouses and factories, for some various products I couldn’t recognize, especially not through those frosted opaque windows, ones high up toward the chimney and steamstack filled roofs. Despite the rain, just like yesterday plenty of Pokémon were out and about, mainly water, poison, grass, and steel types that caught my eyes. Interestingly there were a few others like a fiery Darumaka, and an earthy Sandshrew.

As we weaved through widening, more clean, and decorated streets Saltwater Cliffs, the view of the behemoth of a hotel as illustrious as Master Hunter described came into sight. Stainless, ornate metal fencings, which surrounded the lush garden in front of the first building. Behind it sat an impressive six story building, with a sign that read ‘Elite Phase Inn Suite’ with a crescent moon shaped symbol.

The guards out front confirmed the lot of us were with the Sentinels Union and allowed us inside. Once again I couldn't believe my eyes; it wasn't the sight of all these Pokémon, who worked in the shadows, but one. Master Zeraora stood in the center of the meeting room, and their eyes locked onto something, someone beside me. Wow, those were sharp claws, and such massive fangs, fit for a being of Myth like Zeraora I supposed. That fairly large Mythical Pokémon filled me with reverence, no doubt everyone was in awe of Master Zeraora's firm muscles, sharp dark blue eyes, and the faint scent of blood. “Young Kubfu Doran,” their higher than expected, but still resonant voice called out.

“M-Master Zeraora?” Doran all but squeaked out, their eyes wide.

They took a step forward and placed a claw above the Kubfu's head. “I came to check on you.”

“Me?”

“Yes, I heard that Marshadow,” Master Zeraora's tone darkened as a crackle of static flickered off their whiskers, “that same bastard, whom I detest with all of my heart, attacked my fifteen year old daughter Xuě, also attacked you and your companions here.”

“That is true,” Doran explained, ears low.

Master Zeraora withdrew their claw and stepped back.“You all may speak if you wish of course.”

I shuffled closer to the Lycanroc and the Boltund next to us and held my breath.

Master Hunter pawed at the ground before they tested the water. “Marshadow attacked Young Master Xuě?”

“The White Zeraora who saved us, Young Master Xuě dealt with them?” Makkuro asked.

“Yes, it was a couple months ago,” Master Zeraora stifled a growl. “Marshadow attacked Xuě with the clear intent to kill. All to stop her from helping you regular Pokémon like those in the Sentinels Union end the Disruption.”

You regular Pokémon ?

“Is that so?” the Boltund questioned.

Master Zeraora nodded and held out a claw toward Doran. “And unfortunately they will strike you again, Young Kubfu.”

“They will?” Master Fang gasped.

“Just not in Saltwater Cliffs,” Master Zeraora clarified. “as Magearna shall kill Marshadow if their presence is detected in the city again. And Magearna does not often tell jokes on life and death.”

“I see,” Master Hunter added, “so how shall we search out for various mana artifacts, with a target on our backs?”

Master Zeraora's piercing eyes went toward the entrance for a moment and they nodded. “I shall have Xuě, watch over you all, once you locate the position of an elemental and lock of mana.”

“Young Master Xuě will?!” Doran gasped.

“Yes, and,” Master Zeraora bent down toward me and Makkuro.

“Master Zeraora?” he questioned as they got close enough to almost sniff the dark grey fur of our heads.

“You Espurr, and you Rockruff are the Thoth’s Tablet Dream Mark pair aren’t you?”

“We are?” I asked, my eyes wide. I've never heard about that ‘Thoth's Tablet’ in my entire life but okay.

“I believe so,” Master Zeraora said as they rose. “Your pair name was once decreed as the Dawn Stone by Leader Cresselia but Leader Darkrai changed it to reference your scholarly interests and physical tenacity.”

“So you too Master Zeraora, confirm the Dream Mark? We won't have to rely on the black bells from the war.” Master Hunter gently placed a paw near mine. “Thank you.”

Master Zeraora dusted off their legs and took a couple steps back. “The pleasure is all mine, now if you excuse me-” Before Master Zeraora could get any further, a teal crackle of electricity zoomed right beside me, and a white figure collided with them. Master Fang pulled me and Makkuro out of the way, and everyone gave Master Zeraora a wide berth, but after the….

The steam settled, the ground was fine. Was that all just for show? What was above ground was a different story, the same white, yet not shiny Zeraora, Young Master Xuě. “Master Zeze!” she yelled and hit Master Zeraora on the shoulder. “Why weren't you here yesterday!?”

She just called them Master Zeze? I and everyone else took a couple more steps back from the two Zeraora. With a shake of their head Master Zeraora responded. “I got frustrated that Magearna allowed so many unlocked Keepers to their Domain.”

Young Master Xuě gasped. “You can't be real!”

“I am, I do not have faith in these unlocked Pokémon even though they've controlled their presences and had been watched.”

“You're being ridiculous!”

Master Zeraora folded their arms before they spoke.“Remember Xuě, I still do not completely trust those who are not of Myth or Legend anymore.”

“Why?!” Young Master Xuě demanded.

Her parent glanced around the room before they sighed.“I encountered some Pokémon in Wicked Blow on the way here from Palm Shore and in Hillock Country. The only reason they surrendered was because of my might,” Master Zeraora continued as they counted on their claws. “As previously stated, I will do so through Lauderdale Marsh, investigate near Bristberg, and go up to RedRock.”

“So you don’t trust everyone because of some ruffians?”

“They had trust once, and the Disruption happened, I shall not make that mistake again.”

Young Master Xuě growled as she bared her fangs. “Can you really afford to discount all the work being done on this Continent and the others?”

“Yes.”

“All the effort my Ether Society and I have done?”

“Yes.”

“The hard work Pangoro, Lurantis, Passimian, Cramorant, and Sandaconda achieved alongside- no, with me? Can you?!”

“Alright,” Master Zeraora grumbled as they turned away. “That’s enough Xuě, these Sentinels Union Pokemon have work to do.”

“And we're involved in it!” she yelled.

Master Zeraora headed toward the exit, their ears folded back in annoyance.“No we aren’t.”

“How can you say that!”

“I have a thousand years more experience than you do, Xuě!”

Young Master Xuě grit her teeth as she raced after them. “I don’t. Fucking! Care!” The doors to the hotel slammed shut and a clap of thunder lit up outside. Far above, the vivid array of teal and yellow lighting, danced through the gloomy cloudy sky, only rivaled by the brief flash of sunlight. I guess even Mythicals had mood swings. A thousand years but nothing could contain a teenage stubborn will eh.
 

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Heya, I was running a little late, but I’m here for that P-Wheel review, and even managed to squeeze in that extra content you asked for:

Prologue 3

I should have never gone home. Even though it was supposed to be a celebration because I passed the Entrance Exam, and worked at the League for nearly a year, AND finally made a Rescue Team. But I was wrong.


After that.

I just wanted to forget about it .

I couldn't be him.

Wait, is the extra newline before “After that” deliberate? Also, I’m a little unsure how I feel about the disembodied monologue here. A part of me wonders if it’d have been a bit more effective had we seen it in some sort of framing context to inform us as to where Linus is and what he’s up to presently.

The one who filled the hole left in her wake.

I’ll never come home again.

Sorry Hatchet, and Kobi.



I failed you.

Wait, was that from the results of the last chapter’s mission? Or are we implying that Hatchet and Kobi are in for a bad time in this one?
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"Team Sharp Claw," I murmured to myself.


How could I keep my promise to that busy Lycanroc and all the others in the League? I tried to believe in myself and wanted to be a useful Sentinel. But no, I was just a solo rookie.




"Linus, you'll be with Team Aegisdrip," Coordinator Cooper explained. The Granbull gestured to the Pichu and Squirtle.

Okay, regardless of whatever you opt to do for the opening narration sequence, this part definitely needs more description grounding it. I assume that this is happening at the guild, but I don’t have any solid ideas of when this is happening relative to the last scene.

"Glad you're joining the team!" the two Pokémon cheered.

I grinned and flashed them a smile. "I'll do my best!"

We spent about ten months together before things started to change.

Okay, just going to go and get it out of the way in this review, but take some time to fix your spacing on your TR version of your story, since it’s a bit distracting to read currently. Your FFN version seems to have its spacing much more sorted out, so if you need a quick fix, I’d recommend copying your story text from the editor or else from the chapter’s mobile version and paste the rich text here.

Also, I kinda feel as if the obvious “voice narrating over ongoing events” should be distinguished by italics or something, since otherwise, it will be impossible to sift it out from description of the stuff that’s happening in live-time in the scene. I also feel as if it probably make sense to expand this “ten months” sequence from a single sentence, since it didn’t really sell the idea of time passing all that effectively.

One day the Coordinator brought a miserable-looking Totodile home.

"Who's that?" I asked as I followed the Granbull toward the Med Bay.

Coordinator Cooper placed the Totodile down and ushered me out of the room. "Do not talk to her right now."

This is another spot that feels like it should be heavily expanded, since I didn’t even know we were in the Med Bay until the second paragraph. Also, as a moment that has stuck in Linus’ memories, you’d think that he’d remember more specific things that were going on at this particular time and place since you seem to be playing it up as a formative moment.

Just a week later, the Chief returned to the League with a frightened Charmander.

"Is that-"

The Stoutland must have noticed the look in my eyes. "Don't say anything to them," she sighed before and shut the Med Bay door.

This is another moment that vibes as being very accelerated, especially since we didn’t really get any exploration of how Linus reacted to getting shooed out the door over Glade earlier and there’s similarly not much exploration of how Linus reacts to Nevada’s arrival even in a “wow, I’m feeling deja vu” sense.

I held my chest and leaned against it. "When would I ever see those two again?"

Oh, so Linus did know these two from before they came to the guild. That… wasn’t clear at all and you probably want to make a note of describing and/or foreshadowing that more.

Maybe I'll ask Kobi and Hatchet to join me again? We went on one mission in the Bristberg Lowlands, and encountered a strange Keeper. They panicked, and said it wasn't for them. Those Keepers really were sensitive, but something was wrong with that poor Wooloo, maybe I'll figure it out. Perhaps the Espurr and the Axew could tell me.

It's been about two months since I last saw the Totodile and Charmander. Team Aegisdrip took me on wilder and wilder rides.

… Okay, where is Linus right now anyways? Since now I’m confused by the narration format. If we’re cutting to the present day for real now, it probably would make to establish what’s going on there first, then have him space out and flashback to Glade and Nevada’s arrivals at the guild, and then snap him back to attention here.

"Hurry up Linus!"

"I can't go any faster!"



"You need to do more damage! Hit HARDER!"

"What, My Leafage ain't strong enough?"

Wait, when and where are these two scenes set relative to each other. Since the lack of description to frame them makes it hard to tell if they’re happening five minutes or five months apart from each other, let alone what environment things are going down in.

"Why did you faint from those attacks?"

"The Special Defense Band wasn't the right gear ta protect me?!"

Okay, yeah, this moment in particular feels like a moment that you really shouldn’t speed up like this, since I’m not sure if you’ve even depicted a Mana Gear or how they work in this story up to this point, and as a custom mechanic, you can’t take it for granted that their behavior will be obvious to readers.

Various scenarios repeated, usually in intense Mystery Dungeons, other times when we were outside trailing dangerous outlaws. Not the ones wearing black and white, as we at the League haven't seen them since my encounter. But our foes were still way over my head.

The Squirtle and the Pichu handled them like nothing. Those two were older and stronger than me, they even managed to evolve.

All the while I barely got better. I was just there to hold the Rescue Team bag for crying out loud!

Hey man, considering how there’s literally strategies for canon PMD bosses that boil down to “incapacitate with item, spam attacks, rinse and repeat”, you could be doing a lot worse than babysitting the bag.

My ‘good times’ couldn't last forever. Not at this rate. [ ]

"I'm getting kicked out of the Team?" I gasped. "Is it because you've evolved?"

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I mean, I don’t know if it’s also a thing in the rewrite, but I remembered Linus’ attitude in the v1 of this story being… uh… a pretty poor fit for being on any sort of team. Not that going through this would’ve helped it.

I will reiterate the suggestion for providing more description to frame things here, though.

The now-Pikachu rubbed the back of his head. "Yup, we need to get the others stronger too."

A Skorupi and a Shieldon of Team Aegisdrip were the ‘others’ in question, currently away and training with another Rescue Team.

Wow, that was cold. No wonder Linus was so surly in the early parts of your story’s v1.

"Sorry Linus." The now Wartortle patted me on the shoulder. "Maybe next time."

After Kobi and Hatchet left, I wouldn't be getting my Team. Not how I'd like it. [ ] I left the room. Tears of frustration clouded my eyes.

"I hate it here."

I feel like we’re missing some sort of step for Linus’ thought process here. Like I buy Linus getting to this destination, but a bit more dwelling on how all his efforts and struggles were for nothing or how he feels about being kicked to the side would’ve gone a long way to make things feel a bit more fleshed-out.

[ ]

"Team Aegisdrip just doesn’t want to be held back on dangerous missions," Chief McBone explained as we walked to her office.

"I know. I'm just a weak and useless Sentinel."

Wait, where did McBone even come from here? Was she there for this the entire time? .-.

The Stoutland shook her head. "That's not true."

"But yur a Sentinel that everyone in the League looks up to as Chief,” I sighed. “The numerous other Sentinels are also doing their best at the League. And I'm the only one who held my Team back so badly that I got kicked out."

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[ ]
Chief McBone let out a breath sigh. "You need to sometimes change your outlook on League work, and especially on life. Linus, you have great potential."

"If I did, someone would want me."

"But someone does want to see you," she insisted.

McBone, that wasn’t answering Linus’ question there. Though I do wonder if it’d have made sense for Linus to sniffle a little or something given that he’s clearly meant to not be doing well at the moment but we don’t get much of a detailed look at it.

My eyes widened. "See me?"

We entered the room and there the Totodile and Charmander were. They sat on some low chairs beside her desk and fiddled with some scarves. Not just any! League scarves!

Wait, what do League scarves look like anyways? Since I don’t remember them ever being described up to this point.

My jaw dropped. "What?"

Chief McBone gestured with her paw. "These two Sentinels are ready to meet you!"

I couldn’t believe my eyes! My I- I was getting a chance to form a Rescue Team! This Totodile and this Charmander, I knew I felt something special about them!

I… kinda feel like this meeting would be a bit more meaningful if we saw Linus interact with Glade and Nevada a bit more than the literal minute he had to see the two in the Med Bay before being shooed off. Especially since it wasn’t emphasized that he felt something special about them then.

"Howdy y'all." I ran over to them. "I'm Linus!"

"I'm Glade," the Totodile said in a rough voice as she flinched away.

The Charmander curled into their seat. "My name is Nevada." Their voice was soft yet a little deep.

I took a step back and bowed. "You wanted to see me?"

… Oh, I just realized, but the narration is most likely referring to Linus failing these two. Which is… uh… some sort of omen for the future.
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"Yeah," Glade clenched her arm. "We'd like to form a Rescue Team with you."

Nevada nodded. “We heard you were also a rookie at the League too.”

[ ]

"But you two still need to actually pass your Entrance Exam." The Stoutland stepped in between us.

[ ]

"Wait, Glade and Nevada haven't?"

I feel as if you’re missing some reactions from Linus here that would be worth depicting a bit more explicitly.

The Totodile's maw went a bit red, and the Charmander buried theirs in their claws.

[ ] I stepped forward and held out my hands. "Do y'all need my help?"

I’m a bit surprised that Linus didn’t have any reaction to this, especially since now the shoe is on the other foot and he’ll be the one who’s being held back by Glade and Nevada since they’re not anywhere near as far as him on their journey to gittin gud at guild life.

Slowly Nevada reached out for me. "Well, uh, yeah."

Glade looked away but took it as well. "Ugh, it's a pain to admit it but yes."

[ ]
Okay."

Wait, how did Linus react to this anyways? Like was it positive? Were there worried undertones? Something completely different?

Glade, Nevada, Chief McBone and I sat in the second story by the window with a pile of textbooks. [ ]

"Alrighty," I started, "so y'all need to understand the difference between normal League work and casual rescue team work."

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[ ]
"I don't understand, shouldn't all organizations look out for our duties?" Nevada fiddled with the papers. "I can't tell them apart!"

"And I don't even understand a freaking thing about those organizations to begin with!" Glade groaned.

Ah yes, I can see where Linus’ attitude assuming that that’s still around in this version of the story will wind up coming from.

The Stoutland shook her head. "Leagues were made specifically to research Mana. We still do missions and requests but usually they are also involved with Mana."

[ ]

"Can y'all list areas of importance we in the League check in or for?" I asked.

Just saying, if you wanted to get in some exposition about what mana is and its general properties are beyond the brief blurb in the very beginning of this story, you do have a golden opportunity right here to delve into it.

"There's something in Mystery Dungeons." The Totodile said.

"Yes Glade.” Chief McBone nodded. “Nevada?"

The Charmander stared at a page. "Strange activities regarding mana artifacts?"

Linus: “... I thought that they were getting close to passing their exams, these two feel like they just walked in off the street!”
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[ ]

"Good,” I smiled. “Can ya’ll each name something related to the mana artifacts?"

"Keepers." Glade crossed her arms.

Nevada hummed in thought. "And our power."

[ ]

My tails touched the floor. "But what about them? Keepers, and our power."

You probably want to be a bit more proactive about showing off what’s going on for Linus’ mood and internal thought process here. Like I gather that he’s supposed to be a bit flustered and daunted when his tails touch the floor, but it’s not clearly depicted and I’m basically running off of inference and guesswork right now.

"Our power is kept in balance because of all Pokémon and their relationship with Mana." The Charmander answered.

Which is…? Like is it just straight-up Infinity Energy where if a Pokémon gets sucked dry, they die? I feel like this is a bit vague right now.

The Totodile pointed to a page. "But Keepers could change that if they aren't careful. Although it's not like the average one can do anything so we're fine!"

[ ]

“Can you explain what you mean by that?” I closed our book slightly.

“Keepers can use the key and lock artifacts right? I’ve never seen them or heard anyone say they have, which is why no one’s probably done anything with them!”
[ ]

"That's right!” I clapped my hands. “Mana has been properly balanced for centuries, so everything should be under control."

“key and lock artifacts” doesn’t mean a whole lot to me as a reader, especially at this point in the story. Like I get that Glade’s meant to come off as a bit understudied, but it might be worth using Linus’ inner thoughts to squeeze in a sentence or two of exposition explaining just what those artifacts are and why they matter.

Nevada murmured. "Interesting."

Chief McBone got up from her seat. "However we don't know all of the details behind it. There is so much that all of us are trying to study and research together."

[ ]
Glade rubbed the back of her head. "Aw shoot. I suck at this huh?"

"I'm sorry I'm not good enough." Nevada softly groaned.

"Don't worry, you know enough for the Entrance Exam.” I patted each of them on the back.

Another spot where it probably makes sense to describe a bit more, especially of the characters’ moods / Linus’ reaction.

The Stoutland smiled at us from the doorway. “You think you'll be ready next week?"

[ ]
"Yep!" the Totodile cheered.

The Charmander followed her. "I'll try!"

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I had been done small requests for the League for the past week to stay active when I received a summons.

"Y'all have something to announce?" I walked down toward the patio with the Chief and Coordinator.

Your transition from the exam room to… wherever we are afterwards is really abrupt. You either should make a point of adding more transition to emphasize the passing of time and space, or else do a hard cut and then establish the new location and time a bit more explicitly.

Chief McBone and Coordinator Cooper padded beside me as their tails wagged. We opened the sliding glass door.

There, Everyone was there. Team Aegisdrip, Team Blue Heroes, and the newly formed Team Whitelight. Everyone except Team Vanguard, the Lycanroc’s Team who was away doing research, sat around the variously sized tables. While two particular Pokémon stood in the center of the deck.

I feel as if Team Vanguard would’ve meant more if we had gotten to see more of them earlier on. Especially if they had a period of time where they were helping Linus before punting him off to Team Aegisdrip, which would better lean in with Linus’ “nobody wants me” moment after getting canned.

"Glade Totodile and Nevada Charmander have passed their Entrance Exams!” the Granbull cheered.

The Stoutland gave each a wooden badge. “They are officially joining the League!”

[ ]

I ran up to the Totodile and Charmander with a Quick Attack, my arms stretched out. “Wait, then that means-!”

“Yep!” Glade grinned, her massive jaw wide.

Nevada’s tail flame whipped brighter. “We’ve made our choice!”

“To join Team Sharp Claw!”

Probably makes sense to describe more of the reaction to this reveal here, especially if the background teams also got in a few cheers for Team Sharp Claw there as a “they did care about us” thing.

“So you’ll pick out our first mission?” I asked, as my dual tails waved in the air.

The Chief placed a piece of paper in my claws. “Yes, we are off to the Bristberg Mainlands. There is a Mystery Dungeon with only two floors.”
Linus: “... Wait, isn’t that the place where I did my training mission?”
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McBone: “Yes, that’s the point, Linus.”

“So this request is to deliver an item to someone on the first floor.” Nevada peered at the page.

“And the last one is a joint-request,” Glade pointed to the fine print. “We have to retrieve an item and reach the second floor.”

[ ]

I adjusted my League scarf and hopped around. “I’ma so excited to go out with my Team, Team Sharp Claw!”

Wait, is this request meant to be easy even by Linus’ standards? That was my assumption based off how chipper his dialogue was, but if so, it probably makes sense to be explicit about that.

[ ] The Charmander groaned to themself. “Is it okay to mention that I’m a bit scared?”

“You don’t need to be. To be alone that is. I am too.” the Totodile looked away.

Nevada’s eyes widened. “You’re also scared?”

“Yeah.”

[ ]

“I’m here with ya guys,” I held out my hands. “Don’t think you’re alone!”

Some more body language / described emotions likely are called for, especially since right now Nevada and Glade being scared is literally only reflected by their dialogue at the moment.
“Um, Linus?” the Charmander choked out.

“Yes?”

“Thank you.”

“Yeah, thanks,” Glade said as she faced me. “You’re a good Treecko, Linus.”

[ ]

Linus: “Heh, we’ll be rolling in missions in no time!”
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We sat in silence as the Stoutland approached us with something in her maw. She dropped it to the floor and sighed. “I have prepared your Exploration Bag.”


[ ] I tossed it onto my back, and smiled as the heft of the items inside comforted me. “Alrighty!”

Glade and Nevada nodded.

“Let's go, Team Sharp Claw!”

Wait, does McBone normally prepare bags for teams like this? If not, it probably makes sense for Linus to note it and how she’s being helpful or something like that.

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We weaved through the quiet streets of Bristberg, the afternoon sky dreary with thick clouds. But that didn’t stop us as we reached the huge mountains in the center of town, that towered up into the heavens and even higher peaks.

“Here we are!” The Chief’s bark echoed through the narrow sections of mountain. “Bristberg Mainland Mystery Dungeon!”

This is another jump in time and location that’s abrupt enough that you should strongly consider dividing this off into its own paragraph.

“Follow me now y’all!” I fastened my bag straps and headed toward the darker patch of stone.

“Yeah!” Glade rushed through the boundary of the land and the Mystery Dungeon, with Nevada right behind her.

[ ] It was so cool! Although we were on the infamous dark teal Bristberg Mountains, inside this Mystery Dungeon was bright, even with the clouds.

Let’s go together, careful now!” I called to the Totodile ahead of me.

Wait, did TSC already enter the dungeon yet, or…?

The Stoutland behind us nudged the Charmander toward me. “I trust you know what to do?”

"Yes, we are going to give a Heal Ribbon to a Sewaddle and gather a Blast Seed on for a Blipbug!" I scanned the room.

I kinda wonder if it would’ve been more effective to reveal what the mission was in the description of getting to this Mystery Dungeon, or else sometime back in the guild, since a part of me feels like this would’ve been snappier with just a “yes” answer.

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For some reason there weren't any Mystery Dungeon Pokémon on the first floor at all, like something or someone made them hide away. If anything through the winding hallways and corridors we heard the rumbling of Pokémon above. Strangest thing I've ever encountered.

Another jump of time and space here where you either want more transitional description or a hard scene cut.

We entered a larger room with the stairs where a green and yellow Pokémon [ ] paced around back and forth.

"Oh, there's the Sewaddle!" I called as I noticed their features. Nevada pulled out the Heal Ribbon and Glade walked over to them.

I think you probably want more description than that for the Sewaddle, since at first I thought the gang ran into a feral Electrike.

"Here's the Heal Ribbon!" the Totodile wrapped it around the Sewaddle's body. [ ]

"Er, whats wrong?"

I didn’t get the vibe that something was wrong for the Sewaddle. You probably want to make that more clear based on some description of the Sewaddle’s reaction or body language.

They blinked. "Thank you for bringing this to me. As for my pacing, well, you guys aren't Keepers so probably you can't feel this it, but…”

[ ]

“It feels like somethings wrong with this Mystery Dungeon. I'm not going to stay and figure out what."

Sewaddle’s line vibes as something that would work better with the second half coming after a pause of some sort.

I watched as the Sewaddle vanished in a ray of light and then sighed. [ ]

"Whatever that meant, let's be prepared."

No reaction at all from Glade or Nevada about what on earth just went down? Especially since this is their very first mission in a Mystery Dungeon ever.

[ ] The four of us walked up the staircase and I could see the Blast Seed, it was right near the entrance to another room. "We're almost done!" I dashed toward it.

"Alright!" Glade cheered.

Nevada yelped as I passed them. "Wait up!"

Oh, well that’s a good omen for where things are going to go. Not. Though things feel kinda sudden in that opening paragraph, since from its short length, it gives a vibe as if the staircase was just the next room over to where they found the Sewaddle.

"You shouldn't run off so far ahead!" Chief McBone barked.

Wait, McBone was here the entire time? I honestly didn’t realize that since McBone hasn’t really been interacting with the rest of the group since they entered the Mystery Dungeon.

Right as I reached it a plume of purple smoke shot out from the hallway. I grabbed the Blast Seed and bolted backward with the added speed from Quick Attack.

Out came a Gothita, and a Stunky, but they couldn’t have been Mystery Dungeon Pokémon. Those Pokémon didn't live here!

"Outlaws!?"

The underlined was never established prior to this point either in dialogue or through observed encounters, so this kinda feels like we’re learning it on the spot.

[ ]
"If you know what's good for you, you weaklings will submit and join our fresh new world order!" the two yelled.

[ ]

"Team Sharp Claw, this is an unexpected test!" the Stoutland stood firm. "I'm right behind you! Do well!"

[ ]

“Wait a minute,” Glade stepped back.

[ ]
The Charmander beside her took in a deep breath. “It can’t be.”

You have some really disembodied dialogue here at the moment, at a point where there’s quite a bit of stuff happening in terms of character reactions that is basically left as a complete void ATM. Like I feel like you had a very specific scene in mind here, but there’s very little of it explicitly depicted happening outside the dialogue.

On their necks was a sight that stopped me in my tracks. Black and white striped scarves, with two black claw marks in the center.

No, I can’t.

"Linus watch out!" Nevada pushed me out of the way of a psychic wave of Confusion. "We- we have to fight!"

I didn’t realize that Linus had an awareness of Wicked Blow at this point in the story. This feels like a pretty big character history detail that should’ve been either brought up or foreshadowed more prior to this moment.

I clenched my fist with a nod. "Right!"

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[ ] The Gothita's attack wasn't like the Pigeotto's! It was normal!

"Are y’all Sentinels!?" I yelled as I shot out a burst of Leafage at him.

"Yep! But we aren't useless like you!"

I feel like there’s something missing from Linus’ thought process here, since I didn’t pick up on why the Gothita’s (you appear to have misspelled the species name a few times) attack being normal was significant, since… you’d think that’s the expected behavior from a Gothita?

“What!?” My leaves sliced right into the Gothita's side. "Your attack ain't glowin’ like that Pidgeotto's!"

"What, you think every Keeper with us is unburdened like she was?" The Stunky rammed into the Totodile beside me with a Feint.

I honestly am a little surprised that that these guys knew that Pidgeotto well enough to give an “oh yeah, her” reaction. Though it might have merited giving an explicit reminder that “oh yeah, the Pidgeotto had a scarf like this” since it’s been 2 chapters since then.

Glade stumbled to the side and shot a Water Gun at her. The pressure of the liquid sent the Stunky to the floor.

Well, that Stunky isn’t winning awards for strength if that was an out-and-out KO.

The Gothita blasted Nevada with Confusion, the Charmander gritted their teeth and fired back an Ember through the attack. He fainted from the heat of the flames, and left the other outlaw alone.

Through a slow limp, the Stunky sprayed me with a sharp burst of Poison Gas, the potent toxic fumes choked my lungs and I sank to the ground. My vision blurred. No! I won't let them get away! My legs flared but I propelled off the ground with one last Quick Attack.

You probably want to distinguish Linus’ inner thoughts from the surrounding narration with something like italics, since the two blend into each other and are hard to separate from each other right now.

As soon as I knocked into the Stunky, she fell over in a daze. I slumped over. "We did it?"

You see, going and saying that just is tempting fate that this isn’t over, Linus.

"Don't relax just yet!" Chief McBone ordered as she rushed toward the outlaws, a net in her jaws. [ ]

"Let's help with tying them up," I said.

Glade and Nevada came up next to me and held the links. [ ]

“Now you're done!” Glade smirked at our work.

Nevada finished their section and dropped the netting. [ ]

Yep, no more, uh attacks.”

Another section where it feels like you have overly short description that could afford to be fleshed out a bit, especially with regard to showing off Linus’ inner thought process and how he’s parsing everything that just happened a bit more.

Once firmly secured in the net, the outlaws had nowhere to run, and nowhere to hide.

Don’t-” the Gothita coughed. “Think this is the end!”

The Stunky slowly lifted her head. “We’ll rule the world!”

Linus: “Gods, please tell me that we brought Sleep Seeds along to shut them up, otherwise this is going to be an annoying walk back.”
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"Just who are you vile fiends anyway?" the Stoutland asked, with a paw on her Diamond badge.

Instead of an answer they just laughed.

I couldn’t believe it.

Wait, but why though? Like obviously, these two are doing their best to try and speedrun a Darwin Award, but I think that it probably makes sense to elaborate a bit on the why for why this is so surprising for Linus.

The cackles from the two of them echoed along the Mystery Dungeon, before Chief McBone growled.

“I asked you a damn question!” she bore her fangs, ice energy charged on the tips. “Answer it!”

The Stoutland stood right over them as the two outlaws sighed.

Fine, don’t think you can stop us just because you’ll know our name.”

Wait, are the Outlaws meant to still be as defiant as when they were laughing at McBone? It’s a bit unclear at the moment.

“Just tell us who you are!” I yelled. “I’ve already encountered only one of you before, and we beat her just fine! The League will always triumph over evildoers like you!”

Linus’ dialogue felt like it was missing a couple steps to sounding natural. I left a suggestion for a potential direction that his dialogue could be expanded in.

[ ]

“Always?”

Chief McBone narrowed her eyes at the Stunky and Gothita. “Hurry up and say it.”

With a smirk the outlaws gestured at their scarves.

Then their eyes glowed.

"Wicked Blow."

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Though if things weren’t meant to end well after that point, I kinda wonder if we should’ve seen a bit more of the immediate aftereffect of this moment, especially if it ended badly for Team Sharp Claw.

That name.

That damn name!

Ruined not just my life.

But everyone else’s!

Yeeeeeah, I stand by my comment that we should’ve seen more of the aftereffects of whatever those Wicked Blow members were about to do there.

And of course that’s not all.

That’s not even close.

[ ]

There was even more corruption out there, and I will punish them.

I feel as if you’re missing more enumerated things from the “that’s not all, not even close” bit spelling out why Wicked Blow is such a big deal and big source of problems.

But I can’t do it alone, rather we can’t do it alone. Team Sharp Claw.

But we’ve got some help, the others at the League are right by our side. And everyone else who supported us. Even from the shadows.

[ ]

I feel that right now, you’re missing an ending note for this Prologue from Linus’ end. e.x. if you were going to pull a Prologue 1 and drop in a transparent XB nod, this would be the point where you’d expect a “But the future’s not yet written” or “When all is lost, let ‘em hear you roar” sort of moment that tees up going into the main plot and its adventure.

Alright, made it to the end of Prologue 3. And from what I can see, you seem to have done a decent job at setting the stage for Team Sharp Claw in this chapter. I also thought that you did a better job at introducing major factions like Wicked Blow than the v1 of your story, so that was nice to see.

Unfortunately, I don’t think that your Prologue fully stuck the landing here. Like I get that you have a different authorial style when it comes to how much description to put into a story, but I think that you were a bit too to the bone here. Since there were a couple moments in the prologue that read as if they were supposed to be fairly action-y sequences which were basically disembodied dialogue, and other parts struggled with “telling” details or emotions and not “showing” them. I also thought that you didn’t get as much mileage out of exploring Linus’ PoV as your narration format allowed you to. Since there were a number of points where it felt like you left chances to get into Linus’ head and show off his personality more. There were some formatting errors and typos here and there. Most are small annoyances, but some of them were kinda dragging down your prose. The spacing in particular was quite distracting. If you’re looking for an easy way to get your chapters cleanly formatted, I’d suggest copying text from your FFN editor or the mobile version of one of your chapters and using that to paste here on TR.

Okay, so full disclosure, but you told me that Chapters 1 and 2 were mostly the same as your v1 in terms of general content and requested getting feedback on them if possible. With that and their length in mind, instead of doing my full line-by-line, I handled them more in line with how I do reviews on FFN/AO3:

Chapter 1

I see that you added a couple scenes this chapter and tweaked a couple others. I thought that the additional second scene and the rework of third one went a long way to building up Team Sharp Claw and their relationship with Team Blue Heroes that was missing in v1 and made them feel a lot more sympathetic than they did in that version. Perhaps it is just the benefit of time and mental distance, but I thought you did a better job at getting across the sort of place that Bilei Ye Forest is like in this version than I remembered in your v1.

As for weaknesses, in general, all of the same issues I saw with Prologue 3 were also here to some extent. For issues that I felt were more specific to this chapter, but I wasn’t really feeling how exposition-dump-y the first scene was, especially since while it made sense for explaining to the reader who is an outsider to this setting, it was formatted as a letter to someone who lived in the setting and would presumably know some of the things brought up through books or the like. I also thought your third scene was a little too verbatim with the v1 version even though you changed its framing. For example. you a lot of “initial introduction” to Team Sharp Claw that made sense back in the v1 since this was essentially the opening scene of the chapter, but makes a a bit less sense now after having had a chapter and an extra scene to see them in action earlier. Also, it’s not as bad as in Prologue 3, but you have sections where you have a lot of “things going on” that aren’t explicitly described. The pillow fight between Team Sharp Claw in the dorms was a particularly noticeable example. I also noticed that you had a bit of “after the fact” description where you introduced major world or character details in passing.

Chapter 2

This chapter was definitely the one of the two you asked me to read onto that felt the most familiar to what I remembered of it from the original v1. Maybe it might have just been me, but I thought that your worldbuilding came out a bit better this time around in this chapter. I also thought that you integrated Team Sharp Claw noticeably better this time around, and like always, Xue was endearing and fun to see more properly introduced.

Once again, the same general issues with Prologue 3 and Chapter 1 were also here, which I’ll gloss over in favor of more chapter-specific issues. Make a point of keeping your details consistent. For example, you called the forest "Bileizhen" this chapter, which while it works better with the ‘lightning rod’ line towards the end, you called it “Bilei Ye” just last chapter and should make a point of picking one or the other firmly. I also thought the last scene’s ordering felt strange, since it’s before the two immediately preceding it chronologically. It might be worth playing around to see if you can reorder it such that the chapter ends on one of the chronologically last scenes, since those feel like they’d lend themselves better to ending notes.

I also wasn’t really feeling how Libra and A basically have a back and forth about their situation right after Xue zaps Team Sharp Claw, since they’re not really described making any effort to hide or react to things happening and you’d think they’d have a bit more of a tense / nervous reaction to some strange Pokémon that just casually dropped the three rookies they were supposed to watch over. Like there’s just a weird transition between the “Xue as threat” to “Xue as approachable” parts of interaction between Team Blue Heroes/Sharp Claw and her in the chapter currently. You also introduced a plot beat about Libra and A being stalked by Pokémon after them feels like it should’ve been foreshadowed more since it wasn’t alluded to at all in Libra’s chapter right before while she speaks as if she’s privy to whatever’s going on here.
I also felt that you were slipping a bit with your PoV, since there were a couple moments where I found myself asking “could Aquarius really have heard or noticed this?” Make sure to keep your PoV consistent with the things Aquarius can see and hear. Also, get into Aquarius’ head more in general, since it once again felt like you weren’t taking advantage of this chapter being written in A’s perspective and showing off his inner thoughts and feelings in large chunks of it. I also felt that a huge chunk of the scene where the gang is going through the cave with Xue is basically disembodied dialogue and missing transitions between changes in mood and focus among the characters.

Alright, that was… uh… quite a bit of criticism in this review. For what it’s worth, I could see what you were going for with these chapters, and my mind did an alright job at going off on a limb to fill in pictures on my own most of the time. But in general, I think that you have quite a bit of rough edges in these chapters that would benefit heavily from adding more meat on their bones through content just describing things happening and going on in the characters’ heads and taking some time to polish things up a bit.

Hope the feedback wasn’t too much of a drag and helped out a bit @Kiba Makuro , and best of luck with your writing.
 
Chapter 27- Part 1 Tears of the Desert

Kiba Makuro

Junior Trainer
Pronouns
He/Him, They/Them
Linus Treecko's PoV

Chapter Summary

Linus and Team Sharp Claw are within New Withered Savannah City limits, but get stopped. With surprise after surprise happening how will they manage?​




With the hot, dry, sand of New Withered Savannah at my feet I had to keep going. Orange, yellow mountains framed the scenery all around Rio, River, my Rescue Team and I. I had to go, not just to greet this new sister Mana Research League, but someone closer to my heart, Jin. That ghostly Zorua wasn't a mirage. Jin was out here, in New Withered Savannah. Somewhere within this desert. I, no, we will find him!


The sprawling desert meshed with the declining pit just beyond the archway ahead. Just ahead lay the entrance to the city, but we had other matters to attend to. My eyes traced the sandy mountain ledge stripped of almost all its layers. Atop it stood five Pokémon: A Farfetch'd, an Eiscue, a Sprigatito, a Fuecoco, and a Quaxly. Each wore a black, gold, and green plaid scarf. The Black Clover Mercenaries we fought back in the Brist Mountains, with some new additions.


“Team Sharp Claw!” the Eiscue, Algoa shouted.


Across from me, the Herdier twins weren't quite as amused.“You really know these guys?” River barked, his ears pulled back.


“Yes,” I replied, rolling my shoulders. These Glaives, the Mana Regalia, were awfully heavy in this bag.


“Ya should thank me for my restraint!” Kenji yelled, brandishing his leek.

“What restraint!?” Rio asked.

With a chuckle, the Farfetch'd pointed at me. “I was gonna smack that lil Mister Treecko Team Captain over the head, but thought one of you guys would not like that.”


Groaning, I shook my head. Why me?


The Twins grew even more frustrated, tails raised as they bore their teeth. “Of course we wouldn't!”


“Don't worry Paradise Ranchers,” Kenji cackled. “We know, we know.”


Knowing huh? The Herdiers navy blue scarves fluttered in the breeze, their three-ringed badges glittering like gold. From Team Vanguard to working for Bristberg's Paradise, hidden to the untrained eye. Just like the dark grey feathers on Kenji's head and Algoa's upper body, I now knew for certain they were just like Kobi: former Pokémon Trainers.


“Alas,” Algoa sighed. “‘How many times Team Sharp Claw and Squad 10 of the Black Clover Mercenaries strike and end up even’ would have a ruined equation if you two, mighty impressive Herdiers mind you, blocked our attacks.”


Squad 10 eh? I pondered. I was in Squad 12 six years ago, though I was on a team alone.


River grumbled. “What the voidlands is going on?”


The Totodile beside me took a step back, her massive jaw dropping. “That's the crazy Eiscue who beat the shit outta me!”


“And that insane Farfetch'd!” Nevada yelped, looking back and forth but eventually moving in front of Toko.


Stunned, the purple-Sneasel fiddled with her now growing claws. “This Noble Servant of the Almighty Sinnoh does not take kindly to acts of violence.”


“Sinnoh? Like Sinnoh-pon?” Algoa asked.


Toko tilted her head.“No, Hisui-pon.”


“Ah, okay, yeah don't jump them.” The Eiscue waved her flipper.


What on ‘Stella are they talking about!?

“That's why I said restraint!” Kenji laughed.

“Someone better make some lick of sense, or I’m gonna lose it!” the Twins howled.


Anger in unison I see. I sighed into my palm as Algoa brandished an Icicle Spear. River, Rio, and Toko glanced my way expectantly. “These bloodthirsty mercs just want to spar with the Rescue Team,” I explained.


“Oh,” Rio remarked, her tail slowly wagging. “A sparring match with these Mercenaries.”


Glade clapped her claws together. “Might as well test out our new moves real quick.”

“Yes!” the Farfetch'd cheered. “Capable opponents with capable attacks!”


“We'll go on ahead.” River gestured a paw down the path that led down into the city.


Nevada's tail flame sparked for a moment. “The four of us have your back.”


“It's okay,” the Herdiers urged, “We aren’t gonna get outta sight, just outta mind.”


We'd be okay for our visit to the new League. Even if the mercs wanted a fight or whatever, all five of ‘em. “Woo!” Kenji's loud voice echoed out. “It's been awhile, Team Sharp Claw!”


I nodded as the fighting-Farfetch'd hopped off the natural archway above us. “Yup, hey there fella.”


“I see you've changed,” the Eiscue beside him said. I guess even with that ice block on her head she still saw clearly. Following her, and Kenji's every step, the Sprigatito, Fuecoco, and Quaxly behind bore holes into our surroundings.


“Who are those three?” Glade asked.


The Farfetch'd gestured his massive leek at the Fuecoco, Quaxly, and Sprigatito. “Dias, Luego, and Noches, our special threat defense!” Kenji said proudly, a grin on his beak.


“Yur wha’?” I gasped.


“These three Sentinels are Level One ferals,” the Eiscue explained.


“Sentinels huh?” I questioned. Trying to copy us, or something?


“And ferals? Well how nice,” Nevada cheered.


Toko’s ear feather twitched. “Level One?”


Algoa wiped some sand from her ice face. “The level of their Carnal sickness. It's from the mana inside the Mystery Dungeon they hatched in. All in all this means they're the real smart tag team that the boss gave us.”


Super smart tag team? I laughed.“Why did your boss, Captain Obstagoon, give- er assign them to ya?”


The Farfetch’d cackled.“Because we've got crazy folks like the Econ Bounty Hunters after us,” he paused to look at Nevada.


“I'll stop Seminole and Ocala before they bomb Bristberg or hurt anyone else,” the Charmander declared, tail flame bright as steam puffed from their maw. “I promise to my family's fellow Pokémon, and our land!”


“That's the spirit!” Kenji yelled. “You'll be a great help taking out shady folks on our asses!”


Algoa nodded fervently. “They wear colors similar to what Toko and Jin had on, three unbound evil colors!”


Unbound? “The colors?” I asked, glancing over at Toko.


Glade placed a claw on her shoulder, eyes narrowed. “You must mean because Toko’s friends with Jin from their homeland right?”


“No,” Kenji said. “The colors of cloak she was forced to wear as she made it to Bristberg.”


“You saw that?” Nevada gasped.


“The same black, crimson and dark lavender cloak.”


I rolled my eyes. Just say red and purple.


“The same cloak Jin had on,” Algoa explained. “The one of that Committee.”


Jin. Heat swarmed my face but I shook it away with a tilt of my head.“How did ya two,” I stopped to exhale. “Well the bunch of ya see Toko and Spellbound, that Mismagius?”

“We're Keepers, remember?” Kenji sighed.


“What?”


The Eiscue gestured with her flippers. “We came from all the way up in northern Bristberg to New Withered Savannah, and along the way one moment we felt an awful Keeper presence.”

Nevada blinked. “You like, looked over and saw them at that moment?”

Algoa nodded. “Wouldn’t have missed it for a lifetime.”


“Really?” I asked.


“We've been on the lookout for the Committee,” the Farfetch'd grumbled.


“Along with Wicked Blow?” I pointed back behind us. “We just dealt with some along the way.”


“Ya did? How strong were they!?”


“A Starmie and a Charabug, they claimed to be vice captains for some Amelia Weavile of Xi 20.” Rather not tell ‘em the two escaped or that we barely put a dent in them, even with the glaives.


“Excellent work,” the Eiscue said.


Behind Kenji and Algoa their three ‘retainers’ finally stepped forward.


“Yep,” Noches, the Sprigatito said. “We've heard about you, it's okay.”


“What do you mean it's okay?” I asked.


Dias, the Fuecoco, shook her head. “Less talking, more sparring.”


“Oh we'll spar,” Glade growled.


“Well as long as you all don't freaking gang up on us,” Luego, the Quaxly snapped and adjusted his watery coif.


I held up my hands between the antsy mon and grinned. “How about we just do one move each and then we go fight those two.”


Kenji and Algoa chuckled to each other before they nodded.


“Okay, let's go,” Noches said before she slinked away.


I stood a few paces across from the Sprigatito, while Nevada did from the Fuecoco, and Glade from the Quaxly, and got ready, limbs and claws primed to strike.


“Begin!” Toko yelled.


With the taste of grass-type mana in my maw I shot forward. I almost yanked a Giga Drain from the air to slam at Noches, who fired a burst Magical Leaves back at it. Even though my attack was huge, I just barely cut it to bits. Insane!


On the left, Nevada's fierce Flamethrower scorched through the air, but was nearly snuffed out by Dias’s Flame Pledge. The massive pillar surged through the earth and then swerved to the right.

Glade swung her back toward Luego, her Aqua Tail a sharp blade, only to be blown out the way, and out the water with an even larger pillar. Cringing, the Quaxly converged his Water Pledge with its fiery relative in a steaming plume of mist.

“Woah!” I leaned backwards and somersaulted away from the blasts, my eyes wide. That would've hurt like voids fer Mew’s sake. “Y'all folks certainly are tough as Tyrantrums!” I yelled.


The Charmander clapped their claws.“So cool how you teamed up!”


“Freaking amazing is what I'll say!” the Totodile cheered.


“See how Noches. Dias, and Luego used weaker moves but did pretty good?” Algoa explained, tapping her dripping Icicle Spear on the floor. The coming Winter didn't quench the heat of the desert.“Quite talented young ferals, are they not? They are from the mighty impressive Brist Peak Highlands, can't you tell?”


I rubbed the back of my head. “If we nearly beat them I'm not sure how much of a special threat defense they are.”


The Farfetch’d wiped his beak. “Alogoa and I just wanted to show you a lil demo of their strengths, they're with us to be kept safe too man!”


Man ? I narrowed my eyes. Kobi sometimes said that.


“Yes but what are your strengths?” Toko asked.


Without giving us another second, Kenji swung, dark energy coating the stem of his leek, not aiming at the Sneasel but my face.


Roaring, I rammed one forearm against the Brutal Swing and shoved him away with the power of Slam.


The Farfetch'd stumbled, laughing all the while. Kenji pointed a wing at the three pointed blade sticking out of one of my bags. “Bravo, my Sentinel friend! Why don't ya show us what's in there!” Feathers dusted the sands, bloody feathers. His eyes narrowed as he raced forward. One thought crossed my mind . He's not calling us little anymore eh?


Compared to our fight in Brist Mountain we're almost equal now, come on! Kenji was still fast though! Drat! I tightened the straps of the bag those Wicked Blow mon had. Our Mana Regalia! These Keepers can feel it! But they can't hold it! “ Not here, partner!” I yelled.


Algoa charged up to my left, primed to stab with a barrage of Icicle Spears. Before the blades dug in, a blue fist crashed into each and every of them. Glade’s Brick Break cleaved through ‘em like an axe through wood. One near my leg, my thigh, my arm, closer to Algoa's side, and then right against her ice face, like a deadly dance weapon and claw collided.


“Oh I see,” the Eiscue muttered, her ice face shattering into pieces. “You won't do it out of the open.”


Tiny bits of frost burnt on the Totodile's claw tips, before her teeth sparkled. Pitch black engulfed her jaw as she lunged. Instead of biting into the Eiscue's shoulder, Glade sank her fangs into her thigh with a sickening Crunch. This earned a pained squawk and shuffling, not happy feet.


As the Totodile let go and kicked off, Algoa swung down, her small Noice face covered in a massive rock.


“Not so fast!” I channeled Energy Ball into my fist and slammed it into the Head Smash. Even with the swirling plant energy in my palm I only partially cracked the stone and fell onto my side. Shit! The force tumbled me across the gritty soil, sand covering my body, even my eyes.


“Yer open!” Kenji almost screamed as he lunged toward me, light-blue energy dusting both his wings and leek: Dual Wingbeat.


A metallic sting echoed out.


“Not gonna happen!” I shot up to a crouch as Nevada stood over me, their Metal Claws wavering. The Charmander’s claws still clashed against the Farfetch'd's stalk, even a trickle of blood ran down their maw.


The second the Charmander let go, I jetted in front of them. My Giga Drain flew out as Kenji's red hot leek soared through the air, primed to knock the wind out of me just before the unexpected happened.


“Come look!” a voice, from someone else called out. Laced with worry and panic.


Kenji pulled away his Superpower with a squawk.

Nearly falling over, I stopped my onslaught and scanned the path toward New Withered Savannah. Everyone else turned too. Quite a few city mon had gathered. No sound came afterwards. Or if there was any, it was quiet.


But more importantly the Farfetch'd and Eiscue stood perfectly still.


Dread filled the pit of my stomach.I made my way beside them and saw the look in their eyes. Surprise? “What is it?” I begged, reaching up to tug a brown wing.


“Jin,” Kenji mumbled.


“What?”


“I feel his presence,” Algoa whispered. “That ghost Zorua who defies history, he is near.”


At the speed of light I dropped everything. My eyes locked on the Pokémon close to town and I dashed atop the sand. Deep within a pit a Sealeo, and a Hitmontop stood, a Geodude right behind them.


“Linus!” Glade and Nevada yelped, presumably catching my equipment.


I don't care who followed me. What anyone wanted. I needed to see if it was true. If it was him.

I needed Jin!


Time nearly stood still as I made it to the center, where I couldn't believe my eyes.


Barely alive, encrusted in sand, dirt, and blood was the white, red, and grey Zorua. Wounds festered over his once pristine coat, and to make matters worse Jin’s gorgeous yellow eyes were almost shut.

By Mew and all his children!

“JIN!” I screamed, running over to the Zorua and pulling him up.

“Oh?” Jin coughed.


“I'm HERE, Jin!”


As I held him the Zorua flinched, dropping his right hind leg against my side. A red, marred gash deep within it; probably broken. “Linus, is that you?”

“We need help!” I called, voice growing weaker by the second. Exhausted I gazed into Jin’s tired eyes.

The shocked Hitmontop nodded before he raced into New Withered Savannah. I was loud.

My shout probably echoed to the straylands.

Nevada, Kenji, Algoa, and their retainers quickly slid into the sand pit behind me. At the rear, Glade lugged my team bag and the Glaives to the bottom, pulling with all her might.


“I,” a wave of emotion swallowed me and I sobbed. My vision went blurry. “I thought you died,” I gasped.


Hoarse, the pale Zorua shook his head. “I…” a pained cough tore through Jin's lungs, “refused.”


Slowly, tears fell down my face as Toko barreled down to us and held onto Jin. The Charmander, Totodile and everyone else gently embraced us. His heart beated against my chest as I took in a breath. “Toko,” he choked out. “It is great to see you again my great friend, I trust you are well.”


“Indeed. Bravo Jin, my dearest friend,” the Sneasel, half pleaded, half praised, a sniffle muddying her words. She wiped away her tears but they just kept falling.


“Now, now, don't just stand there in that pit,” a slightly seasoned voice ordered, and I glanced around.


Atop, next to Geodude and Sealeo stood a Delcatty, he beckoned with his paw, and I stared at him. On his neck, a brown, yellow, green striped scarf. More importantly a triangular badge, a League badge shone bright in the sun's rays. Below him a white medical kit, and a basket full of berries.


“You're?” A medic? A League member? I tried to form more words but couldn't.


Delcatty purred for a bit before he nodded. “Whatever the question, yes.”


“Thank you!” I cried and staggered upright, Jin cradled in my arms.


Quickly we brought the pale Zorua over to the Delcatty’s supplies. “Now hold still please,” he said, reaching into his supplies.


Kenji pulled me aside before the Delcatty stitched up Jin's leg. A terrible pained yowl escaped his maw.


I elbowed the Farfetch'd as the Zorua flailed for a moment. Then I sighed. “S-sorry, partner.” Hurting just to heal is how some things go, but I just can't abide it!

“It’s cha gut man,” Kenji said as he shook his head. “I’ll take yer blows to soothe your soul. ‘Is like I’m a punching bag, Mister boxer.”

What?


Soon Jin gently tapped his leg on the sand and sat upright, while bandages were wrapped over his crusted scabs. “Oh?” he murmured, perhaps in surprise.


The Delcatty finished adjusting some excess cloth.“Should be a bit better now?”


“Yes,” the Zorua answered, his voice more firm.


“Glad I still have muscle memory in these greying paws.”


“Certainly, thank you so much.”


Jin's better now, enough to talk, hopefully. “What...” Words failed me. I dropped to my knees. “What happened?”


Some layer, an ever-changing wave of emotions crossed the Zorua's muzzle. “That damn Rook, he left me for dead.”


Rook? I pondered. Who is that? I'll ask later.


“Do you know where?” Nevada gently asked, holding onto their trembling tail flame.


Jin flexed his back hind leg again, a tiny bit of venom seeping into his words.“To the north, below the city of Red Rock in the desert of Scorpio Sands township.There I traveled through one of those forsaken lands alone: a Mystery Dungeon. It was rather difficult alone, but I prevailed.”


“What of those dreadful exams Jin?” Toko finally spoke.


“You said you believed in him!” Glade said, her excited tone probably a tad too loud.


Jin turned away from her as he ever so slightly growled. “I DO NOT wish to speak of them. At least not with everyone.”


A growl? What's the matter?


“Jin?” Nevada asked, voice a whisper.


The Sneasel held out her claw in front of the Charmander and Totodile behind her.


Toko could tell being around those two made Jin uncomfortable? Literally how?


Delcatty left us a few Oran and Sitrus berries before he walked back towards New Withered Savannah along with the Sealeo and Geodude. Even the Mercs took a couple steps back, ever silent amongst the sands. Rio and River were almost scarce, out of sight but in my mind. My troubled mind, that stirred.


I love Jin, but I still don't understand him. Am I at fault?


“Before all this I was tortured at the Committee, for henceforth I,” Jin snarled, before he, no, we grew quiet. “I did not break, I did not tell them what they wished about the League, about Mana Artifacts, and about you,” he paused for a moment and sighed. “Perhaps I should thank Rook, he assumed I would not survive out in the straylands alone, instead of being imprisoned like his underlings suggested.”


That damned Committee! “Well I'm glad yur back with us,” I said and held onto him, slowly petting his fur.


“I am glad too, Linus.”


“I'll protect ya, no matter what.”


The Zorua gently stood up and stared at everyone around us. He laughed, a dry coarse laugh, and I couldn't help but blush a little. “I know you did not come all this way just for me,” Jin said, flickering his ears. “What were you all to partake in?”


“Giving you a warm welcome to Team Sharp Claw,” I replied, before I reached into my bag. In it a striped scarf, and bronze badge, which I fastened around the Zorua's neck. Each were from the League


“I accept with my whole heart!” Jin nuzzled into my grasp.


“Alright!” I couldn't contain my beaming smile as I hugged him, no matter who was around.


“Alright what?” the Zorua asked.


“Yur on tha Rescue Team,” I said before I gestured behind me “and that means-”


“We're going to the New Withered Savannah League together!” Glade and Nevada cheered.


“If you are, you better follow me,” Delcatty spoke up again.

“Follow you sir?” I questioned, as my tails dusted the sand.

“Yes,” he replied, “we've got places to be. You know where the League is my friend?”


“‘fraid not Delcatty sir.” I shuffled my bags tight.


Squad 10 of the Black Clover Mercenaries were the first out of the pit, with Kenji and Algoa at the lead, Noches, Dias, and Luego just behind them. “See you later Team Sharp Claw!” the Eiscue said with a salute.


“Keep Jin and Toko safe ya hear!” the Farfetch’d yelled.


“You betch’a!” I hollered back.


The Sprigatito, Fuecoco, and Quaxly trio behind them opted to just nod at us, before the five of them hurried into town.


Sniffling as a dry wind past the Delcatty followed and I, no, we entered the city of New Withered Savannah, once and for all.
 
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Chapter 27- Part 2 Tears of the Desert

Kiba Makuro

Junior Trainer
Pronouns
He/Him, They/Them
Posted January 13th, 2025
Chapter Summary
With a new companion Team Sharp Claw finally heads into New Withered Savannah. But it’s never that simple when heading to a new League, especially with all sorts of new information on the horizon. How will they handle the bustling desert city at it’s hottest?

Linus Treecko's POV​

New Withered Savannah was a gorgeous settlement, built with the desert in mind, carved carefully, and constructed around Kilimanjaro's Peak, a small set of rather tall mountains. Fixtures of green palm leaves highlighted the desolate yellows, and browns of the various establishments. Homes all similarly accented, with stripes of light blue.

It wasn't just a sight to behold, it was also a sight to feel. The warmth of the sun on my scales, and also residual heat, life from all the different types of Pokémon around. Fire-types, ground-types, rock-types, and bug-types galore roamed the desert streets, a few grass and water-types in shaded pockets, with plenty of flying-types darting high above.

“So this is New Withered Savannah,” Nevada marveled, their tail flame brightening. “Incredible!”

“It's quite different than anywhere else I've been,” I added, before I glanced over at the pale Zorua beside me.

Jin kept himself tucked away in my shadow, still away from Glade and Nevada. His gait was a little limp-like so I'd slowed down a tad.

“I don't only know my way around here, as it's my home mind you but I have other information about matters that pertains to you, Bristberg League,” Delcatty spoke up as we walked up a rather desolate hill.

“You do?” Jin asked, his yellow eyes wide.

“We want this on the low, young ones,” Delcatty continued softly. “Reports of more mana artifacts have been located.”

“Really?!” I almost gasped, my voice muffled by Delcatty's tail. I almost forgot about keeping my voice down!

He continued, slowly pulling his tail away with a wry grin. “Two pairs of elemental keys and locks of mana are reported to be close to New Withered Savannah, one to the west and the other far to the north.”

“That is splendid.” Toko replied.

Delcatty led us down a path toward a bustling marketplace, with colorful carpets laid about all across the sands. “That's why I'm so glad you and the other League representatives are here to support us, in this season of change.”

“Of course!” Glade patted her chest.

Nevada nodded too. “I'll do my best!”

“I shall too!” Jin said, slowly getting a bit closer, but not within reach of the Totodile and Charmander.

“My Rescue Team, Team Sharp Claw and I will always give it a good once over!” I eventually added, ruffling Jin's head. He leaned into my hand and I smiled. Why's he wary of those two? I better not ask yet.

I sighed. No matter what happened to him I was so grateful for this moment, we'll get through this one step at a time.

Delcatty grinned at us before he led us in between a Pinap berry stand, and a scarf seller. Lots of small merchants out here, all specialized products.Far above, at the zenith of Kilimanjaro Peak sat the New Withered Savannah Mana Research League, or so I've been told. Just like in Bristberg, mountains obscured the perimeter, alongside a massive gate. But the stones weren't teal, just sandy.

It was not like no one saw us, considering we had two Pokémon from Hisui, and we're clearly just outsiders. Soon along our path to the League, Delcatty was approached. A Chansey hurried toward him.

Delcatty sighed a little before he stopped in his tracks.“Hi there,” he said.

“G'day Mister F, we need help later!” she cried.

I quirked my brow. Mister F? I guess he’ll tell us his name later.

“What is it?” Delcatty asked.

Chansey held up a paper listing a row of items. “A shipment of eggs went missing from the Sands Rescue Federation soup kitchen!”

“Well we're unfortunately not just regular Rescue Teams anymore,” Delcatty replied, his ears folding down.

“That is true, I guess I shouldn't bother you now that you'll have more responsibility with the League.”

“Don't be too down.” Delcatty lifted his head up. “I'll ask some of my Pokémon to help out later today, we're a bit busy at the moment.”

“Alright thanks!” the Chansey said as she walked away, searching up and down various stalls behind us.

“My apologies for the delay. Let's continue,” Delcatty turned to us and headed further toward Kilimanjaro's Peak.

“Sounds good ta me!” I replied, and beckoned everyone behind me.

We got pretty close to the League here, in this massive city. Massive compared to both Hunters Plains and Bristberg, but it's a tad smaller than Midori Mori, though I haven't seen places like Winter's Reach or Saltwater Cliffs. I've heard those cities're humongous!

“Eggs huh,” Glade snickered as she ribbed Toko’s side.

The purple-Sneasel flinched. “What is it?”

“Don't get too excited about getting your claws on one just because you're a Sneasel okay?”

“I would never Glade,” Toko reprimanded, her tone deepening slightly. “No matter the pressure I, one, shall not break that tenant of the Almighty Sinnoh, and two, I shall not steal.”

The Totodile laughed even as daggers glared into her from both Jin and Toko. “I'm sorry, I was just trying to lighten the mood.”

“You… Are quite fine, our senses of humor differ.” The Sneasel scraped her claw tips together, her ear feather lowering as a blush grew on her muzzle.

I can't figure out Toko’s deal, is she upset? Or is she now flustered? Whatever it is I blame my stupid comments from earlier, I was so caught up with missing Jin that I treated her like a second fiddle. Did I think of her as a rival ? “Shut- er, watch it Glade,” I yelled. Almost lost my cool.

“What?” the Totodile gasped before she looked between us. “S-sorry! I was just thinking what Sneasel's were known for so you don't feel too othered by being different and totally forgot.”

“In my frustration this Noble Servant of the Almighty Sinnoh shall not harm you, my companion,” the Sneasel replied, holding her claws behind her back.

“Toko,” I started, bowing my head. “I'm sorry ‘bout earlier once again, I took my feelings out on ya and am being an ignorant prick about your culture, it rubbed off.”

The Totodile behind me tapped my leg. “Hey!”

“Quiet!” I snapped back.

“It is quite well,” Toko quickly said, this time closing her eyes. “This Noble Servant of Almighty Sinnoh is learning a new way of life.”

I gently grasped her shoulder with a sigh.“No, yur holding your feelings back from us.”

“It appears I have been caught.”

“Toko ya've gotta let out all your emotions, especially the ones about yur teammates.”

The Sneasel groaned as she fiddled with her claws for a moment. “Patience, and nonviolence, unless absolutely necessary, are also minor tenants of the Almighty Sinnoh, however I do have the urge to strike.”

“Great!” I said, a grimace growing on my face. “Yur plenty strong though, thanks for putting up with us. Feel free ta smack or tell us off when we cross the line.”

“We?” Nevada questioned, stepping away.

“Certainly!” Toko cheered.

“I am glad you all sorted out your feelings,” Jin added, breaking the thick tension. “It must have been quite tumultuous, especially regarding my whereabouts.”

Glade sucked in her teeth. “It was more than that.”

“We'll have to talk about it later,” Nevada said, gesturing at the townsmon around us.

A few tended to their craft, others walked, but a small handful stared at us. Delcatty shook his head as he led us further around New Withered Savannah. “Don't draw too much attention now,” he reminded me. “Spirits shimmer.”

“Yes sir,” I replied.

After a few more minutes, we finally dipped into an underpass that went inside the mighty Kilimanjaro Peak.

Before us stood the New Withered Savannah Mana Research League, another glorious three story building, secured with gates, watch towers and transparent elemental shields all around. A field of green grass waited, surrounding the sandstone path to the entrance. With a flash of light, the baby blue watchtowers in the courtyard allowed us inside the barriers.

After he took us through the grassy courtyard, Delcatty waltzed up to the sealed vault of the front door. He placed his badge on the slot to the right, and with a rumbling roar the entrance opened. I hurried down the freshly painted hallway into the front room with everyone else on Team Sharp Claw.

Past the entrance, waiting for us were about thirteen Pokémon. Finally I, a lowly Silver Ranker, got to see all four, no, all five Leagues represented in one room.

The Red Rock League sported red, dark brown, light orange stripes, just like the impressive mountains surrounding the city. Dark blue, white, and black, cold and cool as glaciers were the scarves of Winter's Reach. Just as I imagined, sandy brown, orange, and blue fit Palm Shore so perfectly, like a bright sunny day. Finally, the essence of New Withered Savannah really matched the brown earth, yellow sand, and the dark green of life of each stripe.

“Why do all of the Leagues only have three colors?” Jin whispered.

“League-bound organizations have three color patterns to represent our Hemispheres Legendary trinity,” I replied softly. “Lord Mew, Lord Arceus, and Lady Xerneas.”

The pale Zorua tilted his head.“I have never heard of those legends but do continue.”

I sighed. No time for a lengthy conversation sadly. “I'll explain later. We Mana Leagues have even sized stripes, Mercenaries have plaid, uneven stripes.”

“I see.”

Waiting for us, in small semi circles everyone was here. I finally felt chills.

A Dewott, and a Glalie from Winter's Reach Next waved two Pokémon from Palm Shore, a Pallosand, and Gible. On another side were. Redrock League brought us a Sizzlepede and a Lunatone.

Finally the Pokémon that founded the New Withered Savannah League stood in two groups.

In a sea of luscious brown feathers stood a Staravia, a Shiny Staravia! Next to him on the floor was a Trapinch. She waved a stubby foreleg before she went back to whispering. Best not disturb them. On the other side of the room, a Mudkip, a Zorua, a Growlithe and a Shinx chatted.

“Oh?” Toko gasped. “There is a dark Zorua!”

“Huh?” the other Zorua gasped, turning to face Jin. “You're all pale!”

He glanced up and down at her. “Certainly, it appears the Zorua of this land have darker pelts, and a different elemental typing.”

“This is also quite curious,” Toko gently murmured. “This Growlithe lacks curly fur and rocks.”

“Excuse me, I'm still a fella,” he said as he stepped away.

“My apologies,” Jin replied. “Toko here refers to your elemental typing, from our homeland Growlithe have both fire and rock.”

The Sneasel bowed her head. “Yes I misspoke, my sincerest apologies. This Noble Servant of the Almighty Sinnoh did not mean to offend you.”

“Ah,” he flushed a little. “I misunderstood, it is okay.”

“Very well,” Toko replied. “If anything, I am thankful to recognize Shinx as normal.”

“Normal huh,” Shinx replied, his higher-pitched voice cracking as he lowered his tail.

“Though you have slightly light hi- … Yes you are indeed quite well,” Jin cut himself off.

“What were ya about ta say?” I asked.

Shinx blushed a little. “It's p-probably not important and-”

“Reel it in now,” the Perrserker up front said as she snapped her claws.

“Yes ma'am!” the four stood back.

With a nod, I turned away from them and continued forward. I just realized these Pokémon had on the same scarf as Delcatty, and they stood straighter as he broke away from us.

“Now everyone has arrived,” Delcatty called. “Welcome to our new League here at New Withered Savannah!” Up at the front was a Perrserker tapping her claws on the right side of a podium, one empty spot almost Delcatty sized.

“Who are you?” I asked as Delcatty walked over to the front, next to the Perrserker, all of the others looking up to them.

“I'm Chief of the New Withered Savannah Mana Research League, Sentinel Frierinde Delcatty, at your service my young friends!” As he said this his badge glimmered.

Now that I got a closer look it was a Diamond-rank one! How did I not notice that?! “You're the Chief Delcatty sir!?” I gasped.

“What the voidlands!” Glade yelped as her maw went red.

Nevada covered their eyes. “I can't believe we acted stupid in front of another Chief, and a new one at that!”

“It is fine,” Chief Frierinde replied, and gestured a paw beside him. “I didn't want you and Team Sharp Claw to treat me any differently, especially since we were going to the New Withered Savannah Mana Research League.”

The Perrserker laughed as she extended her black long claws for a moment. “Why don't we just call it the NWS League? Anyway I'm Coordinator Zayon Perrserker, a Keeper here ta get y'all in shape!”

Chief Frierinde grinned as we all cheered for a moment. “Now you all may be wondering how the two of us are capable of running a Mana Research League in this region and particular jurisdiction. Zayon and I may look young but we friends are veterans of the Great Betrayal, and fought to protect those from another world. And we didn't do it alone, we had help from each of your Chiefs and Coordinators.”

“Chief McBone, and Coordinator Cooper, along with others fought with them twenty eight years ago?” I asked softly. To protect former humans from another world, to protect former Pokémon Trainers. Ones like Kobi, but not Jin or Toko. Those two aren’t Pokémon Trainers, but something else.

“We have some Pokémon here in this room,” Coordinator Zayon said before she gestured to Jin and Toko. “Although these two are different as they have been summoned by the Committee, not by Leader Cresselia and Leader Darkrai.”

The Delcatty beside her nodded. “The NWS League worked very hard alongside our hidden Union allies to find out the truth of this matter, and there's much more we'll search for.”

“Either way our League's special focus is on mana artifact locations,” the Perrserker pulled out a box from behind the podium she and Chief Frierinde stood beside. “Mana Artifacts such as the Mana Regalia, and Ether Gems.”

“What do each do?” Mudkip asked, drooping his tail to the side.

“The Mana Regalia are weapons that let Sentinels restore bits of the world's mana balance. Ether Gems help power up those weapons to make the job easier, including giving the Sentinel a taste of unlocked power,” the Delcatty explained.

Coordinator Zayon’s ears folded for a second.“Ether Gems can also interact with other Mana Artifacts like mana scrolls too but regular Pokémon like us don’t have to worry about that right now.”

“We already have a Slate of the Forgotten, which is used to search for Ether Shrines, these house Ether Gems.” After he spoke, Chief Frierinde held up a black matte rectangle with his tail, one with the blue sword and magenta shield design on it. “Not from the belly of Mystery Dungeons but only seen in temples that you need either a Slate of the Forgotten or an Ether Gem to uncover from deep within the earth or high above the land.”

“This Slate of the Forgotten has a map of all five Continents of the Celestial Hemisphere, but let's zoom in on the Constellation Continent,” Coordinator Zayon said. The lights reflected off her black horns for a moment.

Like a rippling current, the map zoomed in on our paw-shaped Continent and lit up. Cyan and magenta specks of light flickered toward the center, a little to the west, and too small to read writing along with shapes filled the right side of the surface.

“These Ether Gems are pockets of mana from the world that have not been tainted by the Disruption, and thus are pure.”

My mind raced: there are naturally occuring Ether Gems! But they are all noted on the Slate of the Forgotten. That's why the Committee wants to create them artificially, so we can't tell how many they have! Unbelievable!

“How does it work?” Sizzlipede, one of the mon from Redrock asked.

The Delcatty placed the Slate down on the podium before he spoke.“One Ether Shrine is marked with an orange Chimecho-esque symbol for completion. Another Ether Shrine, in Wei Tundra is oddly marked teal and orange, teal must mean incomplete.”

Wei Tundra? I pondered. That's where Young Master Xuě Zeraora was from! It's also close to the Wei Supercluster District, where we met on our first out of town mission with A and Libra five years ago. Small world huh.

“Incomplete, Chief Frierinde?” Staravia questioned, his eyes narrowing.

“Don't worry about it right now, we need to contact our source for more details,” the Perrserker said as she zoomed in on the area for a moment.

Chief Frierinde zoomed it out. “There are two Ether Gems that have been secured, one cyan and one magenta, but there are two more colors, green and red.”

“In total there are only four colors of Ether Gems: cyan, magenta, red, and green. I also heard that there are four more secured Ether Gems,” Coordinator Zayon listed, before she waved a paw. “However for some reason the colors and power have faded, rendering them useless for the time being.”

“By the way,” Chief Frierinde added. “The location of these unpowered Ether Gems is classified.”

Classified eh? My mind wondered . If I had to guess either Master Zeraora or Young Master Xuě have it, or another important mon.

“But who has the two fully working Ether Gems?” the Dewott from Winter's Reach questioned.

After she did, Glade gasped and held onto her scarf, mumbling something to herself.

She knew this Dewott? I suppose their accents both sound like they are from way down south in Lauderdale Marsh.

“Our tough as nails allies in black, but they have passed them onto a wimpy third party from what I'm aware,” Coordinator Zayon groaned, her ‘beard’ whiskers flickering.

“Wimpy?” the Pallosand from Palm Shore lifted a spectral limb.

With a chuckle, the Delcatty put away the Slate of the Forgotten and turned toward me. “Let’s not dwell on that at the moment. We should talk about the amazing breakthrough we can see with our very own eyes right now!”

“What's that?” the Lunatone, from Redrock asked.

Good question.

Chief Frierinde held out a paw toward my bags.“A recently rediscovered Mana Artifact, the Mana Regalia!”

Both three-bladed glaives were nestled in there. The edges of them poked out the bag so it wasn't like no one could see them.

“Do ya really want us to show it?” I whispered.

“Show some backbone, Team Sharp Claw!” Coordinator Zayon yelled, and pulled the Charmander, and Totodile over. “We've got the all clear from McBone and Cooper!”

Struggling, Glade nodded. “Let's do it.”

“We are representatives after all,” the Charmander said as they rubbed their shoulder.

“Us three are also Fangs of the Fallen.” I said as I held one of each glaive's grip in my hands. I'm glad there are three handles for these massive things because otherwise this couldn't look cool.

“One, two, three!” We counted together.

Cheers, and murmurs of excitement and confusion filled the room as we held out the two glaives, Nevada held one on the left, Glade held one on the right, while I held both in each hand. Teamwork made the dream work!

“How marvelous!” Jin yipped, his tail wagging. “So this is what you hid from Kenji and Algoa!”

“Do not leave this servant of Sinnoh out!” Toko gently held onto Glade’s glaive with both claws and placed it back. “I threw these glaives in battle with Wicked Blow!”

The Delcatty walked over with a grin on his muzzle.“Linus Treecko, Glade Totodile, and Nevada Charmander here indeed are a few of the Fangs of the Fallen,” he explained. “And perhaps even Toko Sneasel too? Anyway you can put them down please.”

“Each’re mighty heavy so I'll just rest ‘em here,” I groaned and set the pair of Glaives down against the podium with the two.

“Keepers,” Nevada said, gathering about half of the room's attention. “If you're wondering what you've been feeling odd, it's because the Mana Regalia seems to interact with your bodies.”

“Also.” Glade lifted one of the glaives for a moment. “The Mana Regalia do extra damage to unlocked Keepers.” She gently placed it down on the floor.

I nodded. “When I held it and swung, I could see an outline of all their stolen mana. In my hands the glaive, it pulled me towards unlocked Keepers. The power was uncontrollable, like pure instinct. Restoring the balance to save us all, and to end the Disruption.”

The Delcatty cleared his throat.“These and various other Mana Regalia will be helpful in taking down Wicked Blow, but you all heard the broadcast from Leader Magearna yesterday right?”

“With the elemental keys and locks of mana we can permanently end the Disruption,” the Perrserker beside him reminded. “These are also mana artifacts.”

“But only Keepers may access those, yes?” Jin of all Pokémon spoke up and asked.

“That's true my friend from another land,” Coordinator Zayon cackled. “But do you know what these two, no, all mana artifacts have in common?”

The Glaile lightly scattered some mist. “We need to keep them safe from Wicked Blow?”

“Damn straight!” the Perrserker beat across her metallic chest. “We also can change the Gears of Mana inside them. These components have different states they were set into, they were made Primal, and we need to change them back to where they were long ago: Futuristic.”

With a flick of his tail Chief Frierinde spoke.“Legendary and Mythical Pokémon can set all Mana Artifacts Gears of Mana to Neutral, all of the Mana Regalia is automatically there but the elemental keys and locks of mana are set to Neutral.”

“Legendaries can do that?” the dark- Zorua asked, her red eyes widening.

“Yup,” he replied. “Once retrieved, setting all the elemental keys and locks of mana to Primal will weaken their powers permanently, limiting their destructive ability and preventing the Disruption from happening again.”

Incredible. “Will we be able to end the Disruption for good!?” I asked.

“We just have to find all the necessary Mana Artifacts my friend, all our Leagues together!” the Trapinch called, her head high.

“But enough of those mana artifacts.” Coordinator Zayon slapped her knee. “Let's talk about who's going to find ‘em and save the world! That's right, us Pokémon right here!”

The Delcatty laughed.“Why don't we introduce the founding Rescue Teams of the NWS League?” He gestured to the Staravia, and Trapinch, then to the Mudkip, Zorua, Growlithe, and Shinx. “These six Pokémon, and the four that are away in Saltwater Cliffs, are from all across the Continent, some from overseas. They gathered here from my and Zayon's old Rescue Team, Swift Claw, to join the League.”

Swift Claw? My eyes lit up. So that’s why Tho-san wanted me to call my team Sharp Claw five years ago, not to copy these guys!

“Team Skysilt!” the Staravia and Trapinch declared.

“And don’t forget Team Emerge!” the others cheered.

Coordinator Zayon struck her claws together to get our attention. “Alright, now everyone, the NWS League has to go through some paperwork, we have to be an official organization after all.”

So they're gonna go over protocol, it would be nice to get a refresher.

The Delcatty beside her nodded. “Our guests from the elder Mana Research Leagues may either lounge around the brand new building, or travel around town before our freshly created Rescue Teams will come to retrieve you.”

Jin brushed his head on my thigh and chuckled. “Finding us again, in much better shape.”

The Charmander across from him nodded. “With us and Linus at your side you’ll be safe!”

Guess we’ll save that refresher for later. “Okay y'all let's go!” I called Glade, Nevada, and Toko.

“Where to?” the Totodile asked, her tail wagging slightly.

“We’ll get a bite to eat and see some sights!” I replied.

“Let us commence!” Toko cheered, racing ahead, Jin right alongside her.

Jin and Toko.png

Bright clouds amidst the dark purple skyline framed the scene for the Zorua and the Sneasel. They hurried out the courtyard of the NWS League and into the city below, sand stirring in their wake. Almost carefree.

“Come on Linus, my love!” Jin called.

“My love?” Glade and Nevada gasped.

My face blushed Cheri-red. “R-right beside ya Jin dear!”

I’m so glad those two friends could just run like this. No matter what, I’ll protect their happiness. And Jin’s heart. With everything I've got, against anyone. Even Wicked Blow, even the Econ Bounty Hunters, and especially the Committee.
 
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Spiteful Murkrow

Busy Writing Stories I Want to Read
Pronouns
He/Him/His
Partners
  1. nidoran-f
  2. druddigon
  3. swellow
  4. lugia
  5. growlithe
  6. quilava-fobbie
  7. sneasel-kate
  8. heliolisk-fobbie
Heya, dropping in for P-Wheel. You mentioned a couple options for chapter pairs that you would prefer me looking over, and the two parts of Gears of Mana’s interlude was one of them, so I figured that I’d go that route and just hop in:

Interlude 1.1

Celestial News Issue Number # 412

Jovian Continent Headlines: Expeditioner Jones Purrloin and the Admirals have discovered another ancient city's ruins, this time rumored to house shrines for the Mythical Leader Volcanion.

Assuming you’re referring to the Pokémon, that’s Volcanion there.

Nebula Continent Headlines: A new massive Mystery Dungeon in the Starry Outback has just been charted by the Strike True Guild's rising stars, Josephine Midnight Lycanroc, and Chiave Zoroark.

I feel that it’s kinda clunky to have a character with a species name also including the Form name. If Josephine actually appears onscreen at some point, it probably makes more sense to reveal what kind of Lycanroc she is then.

Twin-Star Continent Headlines: Tensions heightened as Master Arceus demanded all Enforcers' and Scholars' branches have additional members placed into individual squads to deal with the unruly Pokemon of the Mysterious Zone.

Oh, well that headline’s certainly ominous. Though just how many of these OG continents are even out there in this world?

Constellation Continent Headlines: Palm Shore City Mana Research League broke records on monthly recruitment averages, over twenty, and of catching Pokemon of Wicked Blow Gangs, over fifty.

Couple small tweaks here.

Uncharted Galactic Zone Headlines. ERROR [CODE DARK] 250637 FREQUENCY DENIED OR UNAVAILABLE. PLEASE DIAL AGAIN OR FIX THE CONNECTION.

Wait, what on earth is even rendering these headlines for that last one to come up? A Connection Orb?

Only a few days of training and trials later, the sounds of wind howling outside shook against the walls of the Bristberg Mana Research League. Chilled air hardened the iron bars that lined the gate and fence on the perimeter of the building, as dark clouds shifted in the sky above. The radars fastened to the corners of the towering barriers sat still amidst the wind. In the front courtyard, the watchtower remained firm, even as snow piled high on its roof.

Huh. This setting is quite a bit higher-tech than I initially picked up on in the early chapters. Though I suppose it makes sense given some of the tech we see lying around in PSMD given that this technically shares a setting.

With the early morning ending, it was time to get to work. If the machines and equipment couldn't make out any traces of importance outside then it would be up to the Pokemon of the League to discover it. The Granbull Coordinating Rescue Teams operations understood this all too well. It was time for some mana research.

Wait, is the “Granbull Coordinating Rescue Teams” an entity? Or did you forget to uncapitalize “coordinating” there? Either way, you’re missing an apostrophe to show possession of “Rescue Teams” over “operations”.

"Now that training is over, I need you all to hurry. You need to get ready for exploration to explore inside a Mystery Dungeon," Cooper explained, opening the classroom door for Team Sharp Claw. "You'll be on your own with the ward, so ask me everything you need to know right now before it's too late," he reminded the three Pokemon. "I don't want anything going wrong and you all getting in trouble, alright?"

Some small tweaks here, though I see that we’re going back in time chronologically, since this sounds like it’s set not long after the prologue chapters.

"Where are we going again with the ward?" Glade questioned. The Totodile then rubbed the back of her head. "I forgot after thinking about those important artifacts you mentioned."

"I suppose I could explain more," the Granbull sighed, as the four of them walked down the hallway. "You are going to Brist Mountain Mystery Dungeon."

[ ]


"Ah yeah, that's right," Nevada perked up. "Aren't there multiple parts to it?" the Charmander asked.

"Yup," Linus nodded, turning to face them. "Mystery Dungeons like Brist Mountain are great," the Treecko said, rubbing his arms together. "They have numerous sections to it, this should mean there will be plenty of requests we could do while we give the ward an escort."

IMO, you should have at least one paragraph of showing off the characters’ reactions somewhere in this block.

"Do we have to go to the one you choose, Sir Cooper?" Nevada glanced up at the Granbull.

"No, you all can pick from the three Mystery Dungeons that make up the Bristberg Mountain Range: the lowland, mainland, or highland," the Coordinator waved his paw before entering a staircase to the third floor. "Now go and figure out what supplies you'll need to purchase while I go get ready for my meeting with Head Tiger, one of from the League Committee Heads."


Cooper, Linus, Glade, and Nevada left the league building and entered the nearby town of Bristberg, a large settlement nestled in a range of expansive teal, aquamarine-colored Mountains.

I’ll admit, I kinda did a double-take at how suddenly the first scene ended, but it kinda works. A part of me wonders if it’d have worked better showing Team Sharp Claw bailing and Cooper thinking to himself or something, but maybe I’m overthinking things.

Pokemon bustled in the cobblestone streets as a gust of late winter wind chilled the air. A few grass-types bundled up in long scarves and wooly coats as they tried to venture out in the town. Numerous water, ice, and fire-types enjoyed the weather as it was. Some flying-types stayed close to the ground for warmth, while ground-types and dragon-types remained mostly indoors, buried under blankets. Swarms of snowflakes and flurries flew in the cloudy sky, signaling an approaching storm. It wouldn't be best to stay out late today, the sleet fall would be torrential.

Oh, so literally everyone in Team Sharp Claw aside from maybe Nevada’s having a miserable time right now, huh?

The League members' route had them headed towards a Cafe in a higher uptown district, so they had to trek to the other side of town. The southeast part of Bristberg, towards the reaches that lead to Midori Mori City. Then the four Pokemon had to head up a long, narrow cobblestone pathway to the meeting place, named Indeedee Cafe.

>Midori Mori

Well, that’s certainly an on-the-nose name there. Though I see we’re in spitting distance of the Japanese-themed area right now. Duly noted.

"I almost forgot, Sir Cooper," Linus started. "You were talking about the various important things in Mystery Dungeons. Could you tell us more about what to look out for?"

The Granbull rubbed his forepaws together and exhaled. "Oh right, most Pokemon don't know this, but Sentinels have an important job to do in place of Keepers."

I… kinda feel like we’re missing a step here since we went from “important things in Mystery Dungeons” to “Sentinels have an important job”. You might want to have a bit more emphasis on the ‘Sentinels/Keeper’ aspect of whatever those “important things” are.

Nevada grinned. "Really? What is it!?"

"You have something of an artifact of your own that is usually inside of the hidden depths of a Mystery Dungeon to check on," Cooper shielded his eyes from a cloud of dust as some rocks crumbled from a hill above.

[ ]


"Yeah but what does that really mean?" Glade groaned. "The Sentinels Code mentions us needing to fix something, but there are so many different types of stupid crap called artifacts."

"Well you are right, I wouldn't necessarily call it an artifact. Although it is an ancient device," Sharp Claw's Coordinator admitted, taking the Team beside some various stores.

Couple suggestions here, though I think that it might make sense to drop in at least one paragraph of description of mood changes or background environment somewhere in this block.

"So what is it that we are dealing with?" Linus shivered, getting closer to the Charmander behind him.

I… did not realize that it was supposed to be cold right now. It might have made sense to play this up a bit more.

"There is always a lever or wheel that is inside a Mystery Dungeon that controls the mana balance of the Dungeon," the Granbull coughed, placing his elbow over his maw.

Huh. That’s rather specific. I wonder if those levers/wheels are natural, or if someone made them in the past.

"Where is the wheel generally located?" Nevada asked as they allowed their Treecko teammate to snuggle up to them.

"It is hidden away, usually by a passageway to a secret room near the very top or very bottom of a Mystery Dungeon, [ ]" the Coordinator took the group out of the alleyway and pointed towards a building resting atop a small teal mountain.

"We're almost at the Cafe!" Glade cheered, pushing past Linus and Nevada. "Race ya up the steps!" the Totodile dashed up the faded cobblestone pathway that spiraled up a mountain face.

I kinda feel that the topic changes really quickly to this cafe. It might make sense to have Cooper say a thing or two explicitly before everyone notices it.

"Get back down here!" Linus yelled. "It's too cold for all that running!" the Treecko cried, before taking off then took after her.

"Oh Mew," Cooper chuckled, watching the two chase after each other. [ ] "Anyway, in turn the valve or lever affects the pressure that only Keepers can feel and are sensitive to."

"I see," the Charmander carefully followed him up the steps as it began to snow.

You probably want to have Cooper more explicitly acknowledge Nevada, since I at first didn’t realize that she was still there and not with the rest of her teammates.

Eventually, the two Glade and Linus made it to the top, marveling at the grand view of the rooftops and streets below. Glancing behind them, the Granbull and the Charmander took in the foreboding jagged edge of the earth beside them, the Bristberg Alps southeastern slope, trailing into the frigid skyline above.

“the two” is ambiguous between Glade and Linus and Cooper and Nevada since the two start out in separated groups from each other.

[ ]

"But only you Sentinels can touch the artifacts and return them to their natural state…" the Granbull wiped his paws off on the doormat of the awning covering the Cafe. "Or in the case of Wicked Blow or other ruffians, they change throw them off balance."

You’re missing some sort of lead-in to focus on Cooper and Nevada here before Cooper starts talking again, since once again, this shift feels fairly abrupt.

Glade, who was sitting on a chair at one of the outside tables, waved to the two of them and pointed to Linus. The Treecko was sticking to a Cafe window with its blinds closed, trying to stay warm as a brisk bellow of air flew around the bend.

I’m honestly surprised that Glade isn’t also having a miserable time in the snowy cold given that she’s also reptilian like Linus. I suppose that that’s just type affinities in action there.

Their Charmander teammate waved back, hurrying up the pathway to help Linus. "Why would anyone do something like that in the first place?" Nevada dusted some snow off their scales, hugging the Treecko. "To go out of their way and be a jerk."

I… feel like we’re missing some context here for why artifacts being put out of balance would be a bad thing. Like what exactly would that cause in terms of practical effects such that Nevada is this agitated?

"Usually to mess with Keepers in Guilds and Leagues who try to go and follow them," Coordinator Cooper reached forward to pat Linus on the head.

I'm going to go check if Head Tiger and the ward are waiting up there for us, sit tight and don't cause trouble okay?"

You have a formatting error with the second part of Cooper’s dialogue, which given how different it is in topic, should probably be its own paragraph.

The Granbull then gently opened up the door, the sound of a bell signaling his entrance. Team Sharp Claw glanced down at the townscape below, watching as all sorts of Pokemon peacefully went about their morning.

[ ]

After a few minutes, Coordinator Cooper returned, carrying a bag of warm fried eggs inside some bread and a cup of coffee.

"I'm sure the two will arrive soon, but now we have time to relax," he explained, patting the backpack on his side. Linus took that cue to reach inside the backpack and pulled out his folded Rescue Team bag.

Given that a “few minutes” are passing with not a lot happening, I kinda wonder if it’d make sense to have some introspection on Team Sharp Claw’s part, especially to establish what their general state of mind and how they feel about upcoming events is.

"Can you explain the other artifacts, the ones in that Mana Temple’ you mentioned?" Glade asked, through a mouth full of food.

"You should let him explain what a Mana Temple is first," Nevada waved.

The Granbull finished eating his breakfast and took a sip from his cup. "They are deep inside a Mystery Dungeon, either the very bottom for a descending Dungeon or at the top for an ascending one."

This one is also coming a bit out of left field as well. I think establish more that Cooper brought up this term in the past before Glade brings it up since she’s clearly not meant to be familiar with it herself.

[ ]


"That's just like the wheel or levers we can use," Linus realized. "What else?"

"They can also be hidden away in smaller Mystery Dungeons," Cooper explained. "Finding a trap door or some sort of secret pathway."

"Ooh," Team Sharp Claw gasped.

I think the “Linus realized” part works better being pulled forward into its own paragraph where the narration should ideally be a bit more explicit about what he realized and why it’s such a big deal.

"There is one mana Temple for each elemental type on every Continent." The Granbull scratched his chest fur. [ ]

Linus crossed his arms. "So Pokemon built that many? What does that imply? That there could be eighteen keys on each Continent at a given time and we just don't know?"

"Don't fret so much, that's my job, remember?" Cooper sheepishly laughed. "In the Constellation Continent, there are currently only four mana keys and four locks."

Cooper’s dialogue feels very abrupt in the way it ends. Was he meant to continue his thought here? If so, what was he supposed to add?

[ ]

"Really? We have four of those things just fricking lying around somewhere?" Glade roared.

"You know it's not that simple so calm down!" Her Treecko teammate pushed her.

I think that you should show the team’s mood shift a bit more explicitly than you do, especially if this really caught them off guard.

"All of the pairs reported to be matching as of now, but that could change," the Coordinator sighed. "And then there are old Churches that look just like Mana Temples, but you know they aren't."

Another concept that’s kinda coming out of left field right now, since I don’t believe you’ve ever established what these things are up to this point.

Nevada tilted their head. "How do we, as Sentinels of the League, just understand this?"

"This is because only two or more Keepers can enter into an actual Mana Temple," the Granbull explained. "The pressure and lack of mana presence inside a Sentinel's body will not allow them to walk in."

I think that you should make it a bit clearer that Nevada’s talking about instinctively knowing something here. Also small typo.

There the storefront door opened. "Coordinator, Sir," an Audino waiter started garnering the attention of the Pokemon. "Your guests have arrived. [ ]"

"Alright," Cooper stood up and waved his paw. His team followed him through the Cafe. There was a small number of customers waiting in line at the counter, and an even smaller amount lounging around the booths of the warm and cozy shop.

The Coordinator and Team Sharp Claw gave their leftover food to one of the waiters to hold on to and finally made it towards the VIP staircase, one that led to the top floor. Once the four League members arrived the door was shut tight and locked.

I feel like it might have made sense to more openly state where the guests were waiting, since I wasn’t really expecting them to get up for this much of a walk.

The view up at Indeedee's Cafe was amazing, one was able to see almost all of the town of Bristberg and the green mountains surrounding the north.

"Hello, and good morning Committee Head Tiger," the Granbull called out to the Pokemon silhouette directly across from him. "It is I, the Coordinator of the Bristberg Mana Research League, Cooper McBone Granbull."

I… think that the mention of the view is a bit of a non sequitur here, since we established that they were headed off to meet the Committee Head, so it feels a bit weird to make an aside to talk about that when they’re presumably looking for Tiger right now.

Sitting on the edge of the balcony fence was Tiger. They slouched backward with their legs wide open, under a purple and red cloak, their hot breath immediately forming steam as the freezing bursts of wind blasted through the mountain tops. Below Tiger sat a much smaller Pokemon silhouette, one hidden in a purple and red-colored hood. The Committee Official, still while concealing themself reached down and pulled the cloth off the smaller Pokemon, revealing them completely.

Wait, what on earth is Tiger’s species anyways? Since it hasn’t been mentioned at all up to this point.

What kind of condition is that? Linus thought as his eyes drifted.

Nevada's tail flame shot up and their face went slack. Oh wow, so unusual.

Glade jumped backward but clamped her mouth shut. What is up with this Pokemon!?

I… kinda wonder why you’re beating around the bush so much for what the ward looks like appearance-wise. Like this would work in a visual medium by off-screening the Pokémon just out of frame, but I think that you need to provide a bit more to work with for hinting at the ward’s identity and what’s up with them.

"Now, now," Coordinator Cooper sighed. "Behave."

The four League members managed to conceal their surprise at the Pokemon's appearance, a ghostly pale Zorua. One with light grey fur, on his main body, white on his head fur tufts, and melancholically droopy yellow eyes. He brightened up when he saw the Pokemon standing before him.

… Okay, yeah, I’m not sure why you didn’t just reveal “it’s a Hisuirua” and then have Team Sharp Claw react to things, since that would’ve made the earlier bit flow quite a bit more naturally.

"I need everyone, except the Granbull to leave," the Committee Head demanded in a low roar growl.

I still don’t know what Tiger’s species is. Though a “roar” is a loud noise by nature, so you probably want a word for a sound that can be a bit quieter like “growl”.

The three younger adults nervously looked up at their Coordinator. He sighed and shivered for a moment as he watched them head towards the exit.

I need to be strong, they'll be okay. Cooper thought before he took in a deep breath. "I know you all will do well out there, take care of each other," he pointed two of his finger paws to the side and waved, his team nodded in acknowledgment.

I… didn’t get the impression that things were nearly this tense up until this point. I kinda wonder if it should’ve been foreshadowed / alluded to in description for Cooper’s behavior earlier on.

"If you need help don't hesitate to call for Chief Mcbone or me with your badges."

Linus waved his hand. "We've got it Sir!"

Team Sharp left the balcony, leaving the Granbull all alone with the two foreign Pokemon. [ ]

"Didn't you want your ward to go out with my Rescue Team?"

The cloaked Pokemon stared down at Cooper, their red eyes glowing through the darkness. "Why yes, of course, Jin?"

Oh, so Hisuirua has a name. Though I kinda wonder if there should’ve been more of a transition back to Cooper than what you presently have here.

"Yes, Head Tiger?" the Zorua immediately replied.

"You are to follow all directions given to you by those Pokemon," Tiger ordered the Zorua. "Under no circumstances are you to be disobedient."

"Yes, Head Tiger," he answered solemnly.

Well, that’s certainly some strict ordering there on Tiger’s part.

Cooper sighed as the little white Zorua left the balcony. [ ]

"I don't want to talk for too long."

"My ward can stay with your Rescue Team the entire day or longer if they have to," the Tiger replied.

You have a stray “the” there, though it probably makes sense to have Cooper’s attention turn back to Tiger a bit more explicitly than this.

What? The Granbull pondered as he tried to calm down his nerves. "So what have you summoned me here to discuss, Head Tiger?"

Tiger sighed and revealed underneath her hooded cloak, she was an Incineroar with strange grey markings alongside her stripes. "I need your assistance in developing some tools."

Oh, so there was a reason why you kept beating around the bush for Tiger’s species. Duly noted there.

[ ]

"What kind of tools?"

"Mana tools, tools that can control and limit mana. Specifically for unlocked Keepers."

"Interesting." Cooper sat across from the Incineroar. "But first could I brief you on some of my equipment findings?"

"Why of course." Tiger placed her paws underneath her chin and stared down at the Granbull. "Go ahead, Coordinator of the Bristberg League."

IMO, you should add at least one paragraph showing off Cooper or Tiger’s reaction to each other in this block.

Right outside the VIP staircase, Team Sharp Claw decided to take the leftover food and sit down at a table with the Keeper Committee ward. A strange white, grey, and red Zorua that Coordinator Cooper left with them. Before they left, Coordinator Cooper signaled that the foreign Zorua was a Keeper and for them to be on the lookout. So the three had to do tried their best to make him as comfortable as possible.

Wait, but I didn’t remember the underlined happening at all in the last scene. How exactly did Cooper signal this? Though I threw in a few other suggestions for tweaks that I felt would be worthwhile to throw in.

"Now that we're free to speak, howdy there! We're Team Sharp Claw," Linus waved to the Pokemon. The Treecko then tried his best to give a friendly smile. "My name's Linus, what's yours?"

"Jin!" the Zorua gave a mareepish grin back. "If I may, my good friend, what Pokemon are you?"

So.. is he more of a “katana and mask” Jin? Or a “glasses and grenades” Jin?

"I am a Treecko, we’re of the Sceptile line," Linus answered. "I'll admit, we've never seen a Zorua that looks like ya, Jin. Is it albinism?"

The Zorua shook his head. [ ]

"Do Zorua and Zoroark usually not look like this in this land?" he asked.

"No," the Treecko replied.

Some odds and ends suggestions for this section here.

"Who are these other Pokemon?" the pale Zorua asked. He gestured with his forepaws to the Charmander and Totodile, both scarfing down some of the remaining food. "I have never seen any of you from my homeland."

Oh, well that’s certainly different. I’m going to go ahead and guess that Jin’s homeland is basically a Hisui expy.

The two Pokemon both paused awkwardly to wave before they continued eating. Linus chuckled to himself.

"That orange Pokemon over there is a Charmander, named Nevada, and the blue Pokemon, the Totodile next to them is Glade."

"I see, I see, Nevada and Glade, interesting names," Jin smiled, staring at the breaded eggs and wagging his tail. "Where I'm from they wouldn't have names like that."

Feeling pretty good about that prediction that his homeland is a Hisui expy. Though wait, there was no mention of breaded eggs up until this point here.

Linus smiled and tapped the table, signaling for his teammates to get ready to leave. "[ ] Welcome to Bristberg and the Azulo Region, Jin! Team Sharp Claw and I'll give you a little tour as we go to look for requests."

IMO, Linus’ line feels like it’s missing a step before he gives his “welcome to our region” shtick. It might make sense to acknowledge Jin’s last line a bit more.

Glade and Nevada gave the last two breaded eggs to Jin as they got out of their seats. The younger Pokemon took them happily, his ears curling down and his tail wagging in glee.

"Unfortunately and perhaps fortunately, the board where most of the local job requests that don't get picked right away is on the northwest side of town," the stocky Treecko explained, walking up to the counter. Linus then got the clerk to get to his side and whispered something to her before they exchanged two bags.

While this happened, Jin finished eating and nudged the remaining League Members with his snout.

"So Nevada, and Glade," he started, continuously avoiding eye contact. "Could I know if you have any friends… in your group?"

This last paragraph IMO should be two smaller ones. I kinda feel that “stocky Treecko” is a bit of a needless epithet, but I was drawing blanks on what to suggest for a replacement.

"What's that supposed to mean, Jin?" the Totodile tilted her head.

The Charmander was the first to answer. "In our 'group', the Bristberg Mana Research League, we have all sorts of Rescue Teams and some other Pokemon that work with us."

IMO, it is a bit redundant to have both “our group” and the proper namedrop. Pick one or the other.

When Nevada said this, Linus waved and everyone followed him outside of the Indeedee Cafe. The winds from earlier were somehow less prominent, even as the sky grew more and more bleak with rich dark clouds swirling together. It was still cold however, and the Treecko decided to get himself a coat from the clerk somehow. Linus then pulled the cloak on Jin's shoulders over his head, making sure others couldn't see him.

Had some gripes about wording in this section. I think you were going for the above.

Then all four of them traveled back down the cobblestone pathway. They passed by an assortment of different Pokemon trying to brave the weather conditions, some Guild Members and some other groups, judging by their different patterned armbands and scarves. This caught Jin's attention, [ ].

"So you are Rescue Team Sharp Claw… could you tell me what the other names teams are?"

"The other Rescue Teams here at our League?" Linus repeated, before he gazed into his eyes. "We have Team Blue Heroes, Team Whitelight, and Team Aegisdrip as our other Rescue Teams."

Jin talks about names, not teams. Try and keep things consistent one way or another there.

"Only those three?"

[ ]

"Yes," Nevada added. "They are the only other Rescue Teams that are active in our guild at the moment."

"Active? I beg your pardon… Could you elaborate? I seem to not understand," Jin noticed the somber tone in the Charmander's voice.

I didn’t get the vibe at all that Nevada’s mood took a somber turn. You probably want to explicitly describe the mood shift happening since this kinda threw me when I read it at first.

[ ]

"It sucks that some of our other League mates are stuck unable to help us because of the stupid time it takes for their injuries to heal. Especially ones from Wicked Blow!" Glade complained, rubbing her arms. "Those bastards keep managing to cause too many damn problems for the Pokemon I care about."

It probably makes sense for someone to answer Jin’s question more directly here before Glade speaks up. I’m pretty sure the answer is “everyone else is hurt and recuperating”, but I’m not 100% positive there.

I'd like for more Pokemon to come join our League quickly. Linus thought before he sighed. "Don't worry, we'll make them give back what they stole from us. They'll pay, one way or another."

This feels like another thought that is skipping a bit of a step, since it feels like a bit of a jump in topic from the status of the inactive teams to “I wish more people were here with us”.

The group walked closer to their destination, the Zorua noticing the relief oozing from them as they crossed a bridge that led to a street with wide open pathways and more prestigious establishments. [ ]

"My friends, your status as a Rescue Team must really be noteworthy, especially to take on this journey with me," Jin said.

It might make sense to have shown off a bit more of Jin’s mood and reaction here, since this also felt like a bit of a sudden shift in topic and mood.

"Yep," the Totodile yapped. "We've been given the mission to take care of you until League Committee Head Tiger is ready."

"Tiger is not special, she is just one of the League Committee Heads," Jin scoffed. "Something in my heart hates it when I call her by that moniker… Tiger."

[ ]


"Let's save all that stuff for later, we're near other folks now," the Treecko demanded, pulling the cloak further over the Zorua's body. "The academy that's over there hosts a tutoring center for moves, they have lessons in the courtyard and can hear us."

I feel like you’re missing some described character reaction here, whether it’s from Jin or from Team Sharp Claw, since would Linus and the others really find it normal that Jin would make such a big fuss over addressing Tiger as Tiger?

"Right," Glade adjusted her bandages along with her scarf. "Committee Head Tiger told our Coordinator, the pink Pokemon called Granbull, Sir Cooper, that we were to take you through the Brist Mountain Range."

I feel like the order of commands here is a little mixed around. Given that these three answer to Cooper, wouldn’t it make more sense to say something along the lines of “Cooper told us that Committee Head Tiger told us to take you through the Brist Mountain Range”?

"If I may, what are we going to do there?" the Zorua followed the three Pokemon towards the request board stationed by an academy.

"In the Brist Mountain Range there're things called requests for us ta do while explorin' the area," Linus yawned.

"Requests?" Jin tilted his head.

"Yea, requests. They are missions where we as a Rescue Team go to the place or a certain location to deal with a problem or look into something for another Pokemon," Nevada pointed to a slip of paper pinned down on the corkboard.

… Wait, but didn’t these three already talk about the mission board and how it worked earlier with Jin? This feels a little redundant right now.

"So we'll be taking ya on yer first Mystery Dungeon trip today, huh?" Linus questioned.

"Yes," Jin nodded.

[ ]

"Alright, let's see," the Treecko reached over to pat the younger Pokemon on the shoulder. "You aren't some kid so I'd assume you've used your moves before right?"

"Yes."

Linus looked over the board for a couple of minutes and then said, "That sounds like a deal, I've found some decent requests for us to take on, we are going to the Highland Mystery Dungeon."

I feel like you missed an opportunity to get into Linus’ head a bit more and show off his thoughts / introspection while this back and forth is going on.

"Alright! Wooo!" Nevada and Glade cheered in excitement and headed towards a path that led to the town gates. The group began to hike up the mountain steps. [ ]

Eventually, they made it through the chilly weather and frosty path, which was too dangerous and slippery for other travelers who waited at around the middle point to the Mystery Dungeons. Team Sharp Claw decided to melt it with Nevada's Heatwave. Now traffic was clear and everyone went along their merry ways, thanking the Rescue Team with some spare berries.

IMO, this sequence feels like it needs a bit more content to sell the idea of time passing, whether in the same sequence or with a scene cut in between.

"So, pray tell, my boon companions, what is this Mystery Dungeon place? Neither me or my fellow comrades from Hisui have ever heard of such a phenomenon." Jin asked as the sky cleared up a tad bit as the four of them reached a higher elevation. They were almost at the entrance to the Mystery Dungeon.

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I’m sorry, what? As in the Hisui? But wasn’t this story set in the canonical PMD setting? .-.

[ ]

"A Mystery Dungeon is a labyrinth that exists as a natural way to travel across each Continent," Linus pulled out his map. "Usually they are shortcuts that allow us to make it to places quicker or safer in some circumstances."

"You have more friends that look like weird Pokemon?" Glade asked, with a wag of her tail. "Are they cool?"

I feel like there should be more of a reaction on Team Sharp Claw’s part, since the idea of a Pokémon not having any knowledge at all of how Mystery Dungeons work presumably would be very alien to them.

The Zorua peered at her from his cloak and giggled. "I heard the same thing about my Sneasel friend, apparently the Committee Heads and staff think it is strange that she and her older brother are this light grey and purple color with dark purple claws."

More Hisui Pokémon, huh? I wonder if they were brought over by that rift mechanic or whatever that pops up in the postgame, since this clearly sounds like some sort of otherworldly phenomenon.

[ ]

"Woah, I'va heard that their shiny form could have their fur pink and feathers yellow but I'va heard nothing about light purple!" Linus panicked, suddenly beckoning for everyone to hurry towards the natural shelter as some sleet started to form in the atmosphere. "All that's from Hisui?"

Another spot where it probably makes sense to show off more of a reaction from some combination of Team Sharp Claw’s members here, since there’s clearly a mood shift here, but it’s not shown off much.

Jin followed them up the mountainside and nodded. "Where I'm from this is commonplace, we are all normal."

[ ]

"That's so freaking awesome!" Glade shouted as they made it to the top of the trail. "After this Dungeon run you've got to tell us more!"

"I'd like to know too!" Nevada smiled.

Ditto here.

[ ] Stopping to rest and catch their breath, the four Pokemon finally sat down around the base of the Highland Mystery Dungeon.

"Welcome to your first Mystery Dungeon, Brist Mountain!" Team Sharp Claw cheered.

"Before we enter we have to go over what we are doing here and what to expect," Linus grinned. "Are you ready?"

This feels like another moment where the general topic of conversation is jumping a bit too abruptly. At the minimum, you probably want to drop in some part where the train of thought is interrupted and they see that they’re there at the Mystery Dungeon or something like that.

Interlude 1.2

A small envelope holds a letter.

Inside this envelope is a letter addressed to:

All requested Keepers to a League-Bound Organization.

Forwarded from:

The Chief of the Bristberg Mana Research League.

The Coordinator of the Bristberg Mana Research League.

All Rescue Team Members and other members of the Bristberg Mana Research League.

I kinda wonder if this would’ve been more effective just getting straight into the letter and then revealing the sender / recipient / forwarded parties at the end. Since this is admittedly a decent amount of boilerplate text before seeing anything of the actual letter’s contents.

A new mandate from Tiger and Dragon of the Keepers Committee.

Attention all Mana Research Leagues, Rescue Teams, and League-Bound organizations located and stationed in the Constellation Continent!

All able-bodied and able-minded Keepers, of any status, Domestic, Stray, and Feral, shall go to any League or other League-Bound Organizations they were summoned to within two to four weeks of their agreed contract. If not, then the Wicked Blow Police Department will be called and the Keepers will be left at their fate. Other prospective League Pokemon must find their way to their summoned League as soon as possible, as Sentinels are always needed.

>Domestic, Stray, and Feral

Oh, so there’s a third category of Pokémon beyond “feral” and the local townies. I wonder what the “Strays” are like, and how the Keepers Committee plans to enforce such a far-reaching edit. Though “Wicked Blow Police Department”? Is that run by Wicked Blow, or…? If it’s meant to deal with them, I wonder if something like “Task Force” would’ve been a more fitting name for them.

If any Keeper of a League or League-bound Organization suspects another Keeper from anywhere to be unlocked please alert the Keepers in the Chief or Coordinator position.

You might have wound up explaining what this “unlocked” status is in an earlier chapter, but it might have made sense to include a reminder in the first part of the Interlude, since this kinda means nothing to me right now.

That is all for now, may the Eternal Lord grant you his power.

Well, you have my attention here, especially if this ‘Eternal Lord’ becomes topical in the second half of this Interlude. :eyes:

There was a forest to the North-West of Bristberg, the teal-colored mountain heartlands of the Constellation Continent called Hunter's Plains. This entire region, named Hunter's Plains, had homes of various sizes sprawled about a vast distance, making leading others to label the settlement it called a village. On the western side, the foliage blended into dark brown and orange colored sandy bases of numerous mountains; this was considered the outskirts and less ventured side of the village. In this empty wildland, there was a shack nestled by a pond.

Some suggestions for tweaks here and there in this paragraph, even if I find it a little strange that a forest region would be called “Hunter’s Plains”.

This shack had two beds, a table, and some chairs, with a fire pit outside. Inside two Pokemon lay on each bed, facing the ceiling. An Axew and an Espurrtwo Keepers the Bristberg Mana Research League needed.

Oh hey, Hatchet and Kobi have re-entered the chat. It’s been a while since I last saw them in this story.

Two Pokemon that two humans, soon to be Pokemon needed. They were Keepers who the world needed.

Once again: :eyes:

I take it that we’ll be getting those two humans introduced this chapter? Even if I kinda wonder if it’d have been better to not reveal that in advance of their arrivals.

"Hatchet," the contralto voice of the Espurr said to the Axew across from her. "We need to start taking our Keeper responsibilities seriously."

[ ] she then sat upright on her bed, brushing her dark grey-furred chest.

"This means looking for things on our own, like Wicked Blow or the mana artifacts, we're Keepers just like the others in the League." the Espurr had the same grey fur on her muzzle and snout.

I feel like you’re shoving some non-sequitur information in here. I would strongly encourage bringing them up as part of initial scene-setting since these are details related to how to visualize different characters and ideally should not be dripfed as the story goes along unless it’s very specifically needed for narrative purposes.

"Yea, yea I know Kobi," Hatchet, the Axew replied before he rolled over on his side to face her. "Living here and staying local isn't gonna cut it anymore," the Axew ran his claws over the unique thin dark green stripe marks on his torso and his head.

Wait, Hatchet had those? I didn’t remember that from his introductory appearance. I wonder if he picked those up since that point or something.

[ ]

"It can be life or death when we make mistakes," Kobi explained, opening a small saddlebag with her forepaws. "Or if we don't understand our roles in society, to restore and maintain the balance."

"I've known this longer than you, we'll be fine," the Axew waved his claw. "Once I go get us some more seeds and berries it'll be okay to head out," Hatchet sighed, narrowing his light red eyes as he rummaged through his satchel. "We'll be fine."

I feel like we should be getting a bit more insight into the characters’ reactions or mood in front of at least one of these two dialogue paragraphs, since right now, things are kinda “talking heads” at the moment.

The Espurr across from him sighed, closing her saddlebag. "Are you sure?"

"Maybe," Hatchet stretched. "Anyway with that new mandate, I guess we've really gotta play our part outside of the village."

It might have made sense to more explicitly hint at or even just outright state that they read the letter from the preamble. Might be getting a bit nitpicky there.

"But y-... our parents never told me anything about that," Kobi groaned, gingerly dropping to the floor on all fours. "First the Vanguard's mana artifacts research, and now this," she got up on a stool adjacent to the sole table of the shack. "Do I have to figure out everything myself?"

[ ]

"You shouldn't have to, don't sweat it," the Axew turned to face Kobi. "Ma and Pa didn't tell me about mandates for League prospects, it was a Keeper from over the orange and tan mountains in the west," Hatchet winced before yawning. "From New Withered Savannah."

Another term that means nothing to me at the moment. IMO if you’re going to cold-mention something like this but it’s not story-appropriate to be open about what it is, give some context hints from Hatchet’s thought process in response or something like that.

"Oh," the Espurr on the table narrowed her eyes when her companion winced. "Hey," she faced the Axew. "What's up with you?"

Hatchet stared past her and out the window. "I've been having these crazy mood swings," he placed his arms under his chin. "And then way too many bad thoughts, what do you call them?"

"Intrusive," Kobi answered.

"Yeah, intrusive thoughts," the Axew looked down, his eyes darting left to right. "Could this have something to do with the balance?"

Oh, so Keepers are affected by the properties of mana around them, huh? Or at least, I think that’s what Hatchet’s line is hinting at there.

"Well the balance hasn't changed much since five years ago, during the Disruption," the Espurr grumbled, her tail lowering. "It's not the balance, it's you. Your presence is the thing that's changing day-to-day."

That actually makes me wonder if the prologue scenes came before or after this Disruption that Kobi’s referring to.

Hatchet's eyes widened for a second. [ ]

"Oh, it has?" Hatchet's eyes widened for a second. Hatchet asked. "Well, I think this may have something to do with my dreams then."

Kobi blinked at her ‘brother’. [ ]


"What do you mean?" Kobi blinked at her 'brother' replied. "Nightmares or something?"

These two paragraphs IMO would work better as description paragraphs that were expanded a bit followed by dialogue instead of trying to mix them in singular lines like this.

"No, much better than that; I had a Dream Mark," he explained. "It's still a tad bit blurry right now, but this means I'm going to meet another Keeper soon!"

Wait, that happens for Keepers? That one’s definitely new.

"Really, I remember you explaining those! I had one too!" the Espurr across from him jumped over to the bedside. "What's a did your Dream Mark look like for you?"

If Kobi already has a general idea of how Dream Marks work, it probably makes sense to talk about ‘what did your Dream Mark look like?’ instead of asking about Dream Marks in general.

"First two days ago I saw lots of yellow fruit, like Pinap and Sitrus Berries," Hatchet grinned. "Then the next dream they came back, this time heaps of them were in the dream," he paused to open his claws, spreading his arms wide. "And then just last night there were these glimpses of a yellow Pokemon talking to me!"

… Ampharos from Super, or…?

[ ]

"[ ] Wow, I had dreams that started last week, first it was just brown and light blue blobs, some sort of strong breeze that felt so real," Kobi explained, brightening her eyes. "Then it became clear over the next few days it was a specific town, I understood it was a place with a massive river and tons of brown rocks," the Espurr put on her saddlebag. "Pebble Creek matching this matches that description to the a tee."

I think that you probably want to have Kobi’s dialogue give more of an acknowledgement of Hatchet’s explanation in it. Also, some of the embedded description probably makes sense to pull forward in a paragraph that also shows off a bit more of Kobi’s reaction or thought process here.

"What about the Pokemon?"

"I know for certain they are a light brown rock-type, I remember the taste of each type of Keeper, rock-type is like cocoa," Kobi grinned. "Yours should be like a nice sour berry."

I still find this to be a bit of strange worldbuilding, but your setting, your rules. I wonder what the correlation between a Keeper’s “taste” and their nature is anyways. And what does it mean if a Keeper’s taste is particularly gross.

"I see, thanks for reminding me," Hatchet grinned before he reached over to pick up his satchel. "Anyway these Keepers are bound to help us and we will help them, which means we'll have to make sure it's safe for them."

Um… are you sure about that, Hatchet? Since just saying, your Dream Mark didn’t say anything about whether or not the encounter would be hostile or not. :copyka:

"And that leads into your plans?" Kobi questioned, getting on the floor once again.

"Maybe, I'm planning on going back home to work on the building of the grain silo and the fruit preserve," Hatchet sighed. "Then I'll head south through the mountainside little Mystery Dungeons to Ventura Woods before I reach the Bristberg Underpass and that Mystery Dungeon."

"Mine is to hurry over to Pebble Creek," Kobi answered. "Then train the Keeper and then use the Vanguard's research to look for the artifacts."

These plans are kinda coming out of left field here. I kinda wonder if it’d have made sense to allude to Kobi and Hatchet’s backgrounds a bit more earlier on before revealing this.

[ ]

"Though on another note… Who are they, this Vanguard ya keep mentioning," the Axew placed a claw on Kobi's shoulder. "How'd ya get their research?"

"They were a legendary Rescue Team. Dad gave it to me," the Espurr narrowed her gaze, darting her eyes back and forth. "It's kinda complicated, Hatchet."

Oh, so that’s why you didn’t bring up what ‘Vanguard’ was earlier… even if I still say you had room to hint towards this. I do think that you need a bit more of a transition for such a big change of topic here. Especially if Hatchet has a moment where he’s visibly drifting in his thoughts or something like that.

"What did you find?"

"By reading their findings I found leads on two separate locations of some mana artifacts."

[ ]


"You said that they were nearby where you need to go and where I want to go, correct?" Hatchet rubbed at his arm strap.

"Yeah, one’s by Pebble Creek where I'm heading off to find the Keeper of my Dream Mark," Kobi said as she used Psychic to pull out a dungeon map of the Continent from her saddlebag. "These three Mystery Dungeons are possible sites: Stoneskip Hill, Timberreed Seep, and Mist Ravine."

IMO, you need at least one description paragraph in this sequence, since this was getting a bit ‘talking heads’ again.

Her brother peered at the map before tracing a line through the three dots.

"And the other’s in either Needlemaw Peak, Brittlesand Sierra, Twistbolt Summit," the Espurr pointed. "They are Mystery Dungeons that count as the shortcut to Bristberg."

[ ]


"Alrighty, that sounds fine by me," the Axew laughed before leaning towards the window. "As long as you take me with you that is."

"Nope. Not gonna happen."

[ ]


"Why not? There might be dangerous ferals!"

Another section that’s a bit talking heads at the moment. I would suggest slotting in description paragraphs in the indicated spots there.

"Most of the time ferals don't approach me," the Espurr sighed. "And I'm not going through too many Mystery Dungeons by myself."

"Exactly," her brother grabbed her foreleg. "I'm coming with you!"

[ ]

"No, you don't seem to understand where I'm coming from, my Dream Mark is specific," Kobi growled. "It calls me to a town where I'll find another Keeper- your Dream Mark is vague, you can find plenty of yellow things on the way to Bristberg."

Ditto here, though now that Kobi mentions it, why is there such a difference in specificity between these two’s Dream Marks?

"But then why don't you just come with me after you find your Keeper?" the Axew begged. "I can leave early and go through all across Hunters Plains fighting ferals and we can forget about those artifacts till we're in the League-"

"I'm going to be researching the Vanguard's findings, something you should be doing," the Espurr sighed. "And teaching the Keeper I will find. You should try to do the same, not worrying about ferals."

"But what if Wicked Blow finds ya?" Hatchet pestered.

I mean, he’s got a point there…

[ ]

"Stop trying to change the subject, you know both of us can't miss the appointment with the League!"

I think that Kobi’s mood shift is big enough to show off a bit more instead of leaving it wholly implicit.

"But-"

"You've known how to read much longer than I have," Kobi grumbled. "The Wicked Blow Police will get us! Not just the normal Pokemon Police, we'll be treated like those bastards again!"

… Oh, so Wicked Blow does have a police body? I’m a bit confused now.

[ ]


"Okay," Hatchet lamented. "After our family finishes that construction project I'll go to Bristberg, to tell them what you're up to."

"Thanks," the Espurr smiled, opening the front door. "I've got to leave right away so I can try and hurry back before the four weeks are up, take care now!"

[ ]

I’m not really feeling your ending note (or rather the lack of one) here. I think consider closing with some sort of “heading off” / “parting thought” moment.

Alright, made it to the end, which took a bit longer than I anticipated. This interlude was a bit rough around the edges, so the more critical section will be on the lengthier side, but before then, I’d like to focus on the stuff I liked. I was fond of seeing the new characters that you brought in. Tiger and Jin were both fun to see, while both clearly have quite a few mysteries attached to them. I hope that they’ll also show up in the main plot, since they feel like they’d be fun to follow. It was also nice to see Kobi and Hatchet again. I’m not sure if they were worked into the chapters before this Interlude as part of your rewrite, but I thought that we got a nice expansion over what we saw of them last time. I also liked the massive worldbuilding implications came out from your casual reveal that Jin is from Hisui. The Hisui. I’m still not fully sure what that’s pointing at for the broader plot, but you’ve certainly got my attention there. The other worldbuilding wasn’t bad either, even if some of it felt like it was a bit short on framing context.

Alright, onto the more critical part that I alluded to. But I noticed that in these chapters that you had recurring issues with punctuation, grammar, and phrasing. I would suggest reading through these chapters aloud at some point to help find those iffy areas and tweak them a bit. You also had some general issues with description. Some sections feel underdescribed and left opportunities on the table to set the scene for things going on or the mood of the characters, which resulted in a number of “talking heads” sequences. Other sections brought up bits of description that were not really topical to what was going on, it was particularly noticeable in the scene in the Interlude’s second part where Kobi and Hatchet have their back and forth and we’re just randomly getting mentions of them having specific markings along with their banter.

I also felt there was a bit of an issue with some conversations skipping steps going from one topic to the next. Most of those would’ve benefitted either from an added description paragraph to sell the passage of time or else adding more dialogue to bridge the topics better. Lastly, this chapter was another one that seemed to suffer from casually bringing up phenomena exclusive to this setting without providing enough context to guess at what was going on, e.x. the mentions of Keepers being “unlocked” kinda meant nothing to me, so I didn’t grasp the significance of it. I assume that you might have spelled out how things worked in earlier chapters, but it probably would’ve made sense to occasionally give context clues or reminders of “oh yeah, that’s how this works”.

Sorry if this wasn’t quite what you wanted to hear for a review, @Kiba Makuro . But I hope that the feedback was helpful and wish you the best of luck with your future writings.
 
Chapter 26 Part 2 Setting Dusk New

Kiba Makuro

Junior Trainer
Pronouns
He/Him, They/Them
Posted March 12th, 2025
Chapter Summary
Kobi, Makkuro, Doran finally train their moves with Fang and Hunter. Afterwards they stumble across a few interesting sights.What could be out there in the mists?
Kobi Espurr's POV​




After Master Zeraora and Young Master Xuě bolted out of the Elite Phase Inn, all forty branches of the whole Sentinels Union had a reasonable meeting. Makkuro, Doran, and I followed Master Hunter and Master Fang into a large ballroom, the three claw and thumb logo pictured on different checkered and striped banners along the perimeter, reflected in the crystal ceiling. Those symbols meant something yeah, how close we were to ‘the will of Leader Cresselia, and Leader Darkrai clawing out a better future.’ Weeks? Months? I can't go another year of this Disruption.


The five of us settled into a row far in the back, the auditorium lights dimmed a slight green as the rest of the hundreds strong audience made their way into their designated seats. Such nice ones, plush fabricated chairs fit for a Combee, an Onix, and anything in between. Our day was far from over.


A reasonable meeting heh. Bloody boring, more like. If not for the information given, I’d call it insufferable. It wasn't a grand spectacle like Leader Magearna's multi-day seminar. The Sentinels Union leadership, a Bronzong, an Arctozolt, however the latter worked here I don't know, and quite a few other types of mon were like the worst combination of older folk I knew back home like Opal and Professor Magnolia. They were long-winded and sticklers for officialism. Pains of formality. Full names for every single thing important underneath the sun, all organizations, all mana artifacts, and all Pokémon.


And they just so happened to mention Team Vanguard. Or rather ‘the long-gone, but never forgotten Rescue Team from the Bristberg Mana Research League’ as Bronzong put it. Thankfully the Lycanroc beside me just chuckled, a low rumble deep in their throat. “It's like a breath of fresh air,” they explained once I caught their gaze.


“Really?” I questioned,“Things are heating up, no?”


Master Fang gestured a paw at the Pokémon in the rows ahead, all wearing black cloaks, beads, and scarves. Fist, Pride, and their apprentices sat in a different row for once, and couldn’t see us, but we'd be fine without them.“We used to hide our name and all of our efforts.”


“I get how ya feel,” I whispered. “Being forced to hide my knowledge and who I am.”


The blue of their eyes gleamed. “Oh, really now?” the Lycanroc whispered back.


A blush crept into my cheeks. I meant being a former Pokémon Trainer, and being into girls, well maybe more.This could go way too many ways, and I didn’t like that.“Let’s not talk about it.”


Chuckling, Master Fang ruffled my head fur. “Sure thing.”


Finally, after describing each branch’s status quo, all the leaders wrapped up the meeting. Finding either Kanamori Leafeon of Wicked Blow, Ether Gems, or the elemental key and lock of mana were our top priorities, each to end the Disruption, or at least make it easier. We exited the ballroom into the hotel foyer. Everyone else hurried past while we caught our breath.


Master Hunter shook her body as the air chilled in the building slightly. “Good meeting right?”


I shivered. “A bit long-winded.”


“Totally man,” Doran said with a yawn.


A fiery-Ninetales gave a curious glance our way and then onward, and I know partially it was because he saw a Kubfu, but it was also because of what they said.


“Excuse me?” I asked. A former Pokémon Trainer can’t go mentioning men, in this world of Pokemon without them, well the word. Ideals and identity aside, male Pokémon of this world seldom, or rather never referred to themselves that way.


“I meant what I said mate, no ill will ta the Sentinels Union officials, just long-winded man.”


Makkuro nudged them, a scowl on his muzzle.“You mean mon.”


The Kubfu blinked for a moment. “Ah, you're right, my apologies.”


“Okay.”


“Cheers,” I replied. I still don't get Doran. Why are they acting so stubborn about this?


“Let's head on down to the practice field,” Master Fang said, stifling a yawn with a foreleg.


It was quite the trek, but we left the Elite Phase Inn, and ventured through the cloudy City of Saltwater Cliffs, now with more traffic. When I'd went somewhere in Galar like Spikemuth or Chirchester, chaps asked ‘for business or for pleasure’ whenever there's a queue to get somewhere. In this world those lines blurred more often. All along the streets, tourists, citizens, and anyone in between came in droves, all on their way somewhere..


Unfortunately, there wasn't anything else new to see on our trip through the seashell, and coin-filled streets of Saltwater Cliffs, especially since we kept the same path as last time. Makkuro and Doran eyed the route over to Fort Palifin, and the Black Castle but eventually sighed as we passed it with no fanfare.


“Smeargle and Morpeko made such a big deal about this place but we can't even go anywhere!” the Rockruff spat, digging his paws over the cobblestone.


The Kubfu leaned closer. “Anywhere that’s not stuffy as-”


“It's not a sightseeing trip,” I explained, a growl rumbling in my throat as I hissed. “What really matters is getting those four back at that awful mingin’ rubbish scrap!”


“That what?” Master Hunter asked, placing a paw near my side.


I shook my head. “Our little fight went terrible, that's all.”


Doran ribbed me gently, laughing all the while.“Ya keep letting out that Cold Crown accent, these folks can hardly understand it love.”


Love? I stood still for a second before I grinned. “Shut it pronounced one.”


“I suppose my accent is pronounced, but don't melt that crown of yours.”


“Kobi can't help it that Morpeko and Smeargle make her mad, they're annoying and even roped in Aron and Impidimp,” the Rockruff behind us clarified.


“I'm not so sure about that roping in part,” Master Fang said, before leading us closer to the outskirts. “A little rivalry between apprentices isn't a bad thing.”


“Oh yeah, I had rivals back in my village so I understand,” Makkuro said, his tail slowly wagging.


“That's nice, now why couldn't this village teach you about Keepers, Wicked Blow, and the elemental keys and locks of mana,” the Lycanroc laughed. “Would have made things way easier!”


The Rockruff shivered before he shot back.“V-village superstitions are part of our culture, that's all!”


“Right right,” Master Hunter chuckled.


I stifled my laugh. Quick with that village lie huh, what have I started?


The five of us once again headed down that same path. A winding path that nearly led to destruction. I felt it in my bones with each and every step of my paws. Brisk, rain dusted gales barreled through the sky once more. Common happenstance in Saltwater Cliffs, not like Legendaries hidden away for centuries finally unleashing their might. Just daily showers, ones from the cloudy sky, not a bath.


Like the briny wind, the trauma from yesterday was something my body remembered but my mind did not, not until we reached the same stretch of land where Marshadow attacked us. Why must I always be targeted? Can’t ever have peace in this world, not with Hatchet, not with Makkuro, and not with Doran. A chill tore through my fur, and flesh, my whole body as my pawpads dusted the scarred hills, ruined pieces of stone, carved by each of our powerful moves.


“We'll prevent this from happening ever again,” Master Hunter said, her eyes narrow. The Boltund dipped her head down and sniffed the rocky knolls for a moment.


Close to the ground, it didn’t take much for the faint scents of our past conflict to enter my nose. Thankfully instead of an overwhelming smoke, or whey-like smell, one from ghost and fighting-type respectively, all I tasted was warm sugar. A sickly sweet contradiction, Leader Magearna's killing strength of fairy-type mana permeated the land. They called Saltwater Cliffs their domain, their territory so to speak; I was safe from Marshadow.


Further past those hills, a dark wooden signpost, lit up with torch lights directed us to a place of civilization. With daytime this dark I supposed, we needed the extra light. Wooden fences with rows of dolls of some sort, the practice court.


“Alrighty now!” Doran cheered.“Let's get the show on the road.”


I rolled my eyes. “What show? What will you show me?”


“Well I'll show you some fancy moves.” The Kubfu flexed their wimpy arms.


“Fancy?” Makkuro sighed.“Really Doran, you're not fancy.”


Doran suddenly crossed their arms, nose twitching.“I suppose so after that fight with that big old Marshadow,” they said. “I might as well be a nuisance.”


What are these theatrics, teasing then throwing the towel in? “Doran love,” I offered, brushing against their side. “You were there for me, I, nah, we are fer you.”


“Only because you now know how I really am.”


The Rockruff beside me glanced down. “Oh come on, don't be like that, everyone makes mistakes.”


“Mistake expert here huh?” Doran giggled.


“What do you know Doran?” Makkuro sighed, his tail raising.


The Kubfu threw up their paws, as they backed away. “Sorry mate, it was just a joke.”


“You think I'm a joke?”


“That's not what I was talking about but whatever.”


Growling, I shoved myself in between the two. “Doran git,” I said, “you're absolutely taking the mick here, lay off.”


Above me the Kubfu waggled a paw pad, that same incorrigible smirk on their muzzle.“Ya just called me love a minute ago. Now my teasing makes me a git?”


My face heated as fast as my-


“Now now,” Master Hunter said, slowing to a halt.


Next to them the Lycanroc in front of us stopped in their tracks and waved a paw at Makkuro and Doran.“It's all right everyone,” they explained. “We're safe here and there's others training.”


Far off in the distance were some of the Expedition Society members, a Lopunny, and a Quilava, each hitting some rather large Substitutes with their attacks, only for it to reappear unscathed. I supposed that’s how Pokemon trained to the fullest without scraping some poor mon to the wringer.


“I guess so,” the Rockruff sighed.


“They're far enough away,” Master Hunter explained. “So we won't bother them but they can see, so we'll have eyes on us. “


Makkuro sighed.“I'll try not to embarrass myself.”


“Listen,” the Boltund spoke before she cleared her throat. “Learning how to fight may be embarrassing, but in this world to make a change, especially for the Disruption you have to fight.”


Master Fang sat down and pulled out the bags from underneath their cloak.“Let’s review the basics,” they said, pouring out five small objects.


I gave them a good once over. “Ah, there's those little mouth pieces we breathed into, along with the sheet music.”


The Kubfu huffed. “Review? I’ve never heard of any in my seven years of wandering.”


“To use a move safely as an unlocked Keeper one must keep peace in their heart and mind,” Master Hunter said.


Unlocked. I nearly forgot about that status, the one that ruined my life from the moment I was summoned to this world, and the same that was cut into thousands of other Keepers across the Celestial Hemisphere. Just like someone I hold dear, Hatchet, he must have been unlocked. But by who?


“Really?” Doran asked, a smirk on their maw.


Shaking their head, the Lycanroc sighed.“Yes.”


The Boltund beside them placed a paw on one of the metallic mouthpieces.“We must use the Breath of Mana to weaken the strength of our unlocked presence and channel our elemental attacks properly.”


“Sounds almost like a game,” the Kubfu scoffed as they crossed their arms.


“If making it a game helps you focus it can be a game,” Master Fang said, gruffness caught in their throat before they attached the metallic cylinders to the base.


Master Hunter dug through her own bag for a writing scroll. Then gave us our objective.“It's time to practice our moves again, even though it's been quite a while.”


“A while?” Makkuro chuckled.


I laughed. “It's only been like three or four days.”


“Then show me each of your moves since it's only been three or four days!” the Lycanroc said, their tail wagging.


“Shite, ya got me,” I sighed.


“I bet you can do it.”


“Nah, I'd rather not.”


“Let's raise that confidence.”


“Okay.”


We picked up the mouth pieces and started our breathing exercises. Breathe in for four beats, breathe out for four beats, gradually increasing to in for eight out for sixteen, and then decreasing to in for two beats out for eight. Then Master Fang and Hunter hummed that short little melody they played last time. Makkuro, Doran, and I tried to follow along with each note, length, and articulation. Music was so hard! Pokémon lung capacity and jaw strength were something I've gotten used to over these five years, and some change here, but throwing an instrument into the equation made it tricky. And I wasn't in the mood to make friends with a Fenniken!


“Ugh,” I coughed, dropping my mouthpiece, one caked in slobber and now marked by my Espurr teeth, tiny grooves chomped in the wooden barrel.


Makkuro groaned too. “All of this is to save Pokémon, just gotta remember that.”


“Yep,” I replied.


Master Hunter spat her mouthpiece out and panted for a moment. “Nothing like a good warmup.”


Collapsed on the ground lay Doran, huffing and puffing. “T-this is a warm up?”


The Lycanroc clarified. “Now you shall practice utilizing the Breath of Mana before you use each of your moves, if done successfully your unlocked powers will not spill out and you will remain… Sane and sensible in combat.”


I wracked my thoughts. What were those side effects of being unlocked called? Aggressive tendencies, disrespectful, though I'm not sure that ones a label, uncontrollable emotions, and whatnot.


The Kubfu staggered upright, the mouthpiece in a paw.“You got it boss, not gonna be a loon.”


Master Fang nodded.“As a Kubfu Doran, you can access a higher form or technique of Breath of Mana, one called the War Chant.”


“I got something called a bloody War Chant?!” Doran yelled, round ears pulled back. “That's incredible!”


That's what gets them excited? I suppose Doran was an avid battler as a Trainer.


“Well unfortunately only a Pokémon of Myth or Legend can teach you,” Master Hunter added.


“Damn,” the Kubfu spat, falling to the ground.


“Let's get on with it!” Makkuro nudged them up. “I haven't been able to use my moves properly!”


“One step at a time,” the Lycanroc urged.


His ears lowered. “Sorry.”


The Boltund drew four circles in the soft soil with her foreleg, before she spoke. “Now try to form a move, pick one that shares your own type, and take in that mana.”


“I'll do Psychic,” I explained, taking a deep breath. Using moves was like scooping up paint from a palette and then applying that paint to a canvas. Take in the psychic-type mana from the land, that’s all I had to do.


The Rockruff beside me gritted his teeth. I guessed he’s going for Rock Tomb. On the other hand Doran went for a Rock Smash.


Master Fang cleared their throat. “Now, use the Breath of Mana to peacefully transfer the power into your moves. Wish for tranquility, safety for all, ones you cherish, or anything that will bring about the end of the Disruption.”


Right, let's end that bloody thing. I took a deep breath, humming that same peacebaring melody. Something peaceful, like seeing Hatchet and Linus again, and having happy memories. Light purple mana, from Psychic slowly built up above my head, the Breath of Mana billowing inside my chest with a slight glow.


“Now release!” Master Hunter ordered.


Unlike anything I've ever seen, my Psychic darted out of my grasp and sliced through the largest substitute doll, the red one. I hadn't even aimed at it. In front of us, stood six dolls of varying height, and color. Psychics light purple strands of energy fierce as it dispersed into the sky.


To my side, Makkuro's Rock Tomb barreled against another doll, a green one, each piece of stone solid as it rained from above, heavy and firm. His throat shimmered with the Breath of Mana too. Rock Tomb didn't break apart!


A hollow thunk resonated ahead, and I swiveled toward it. Doran's fist crashed into the substitute in between ours, their Rock Smash's red mana swirling in a splash off the blue one. The pulsing pain from their presence whipped out mere moments later. Though Doran's maw did glow, partial Breath of Mana's efforts were true.


“Nice attempt for your first Breath of Mana, Doran,” Master Hunter cringed from the force, ears flat.


“I'm the boss ain't I?” The Kubfu stuck out their tongue, and winked, specifically at me.


“No,” the Lycanroc chided. “We still felt that same overwhelming Legendary gut punch.”


“More like nut punch,” Makkuro groaned, tail in between his legs, eyes practically glued shut.


Doran patted their own thigh for a second. “I heard ya just got your lads, they'll be fine.”


“Excuse me?”


The Kubfu chuckled, as their huge eyebrows drooped. “I- I meant to say, I'll be kind to ya all lads, just like Xuě, er Young Master and Leader Magearna, a real kind boss.”


Kind as in not crushing us with their move's pressure I suppose. I glared at Doran as my own aches continued. “Ya ain't the boss yet mate.”


Without warning Master Fang drilled us once more.“Again!”


Nice and safe, how about being stronger, one day I'll be able to evolve! I took in that same psychic-type mana from the world, and calmed my nerves. Just like earlier the light purple flickered-


“Release!” the Boltund shouted. Nearly scared the daylights outta me fer Zacian's sake!


Like a sneeze you can't control, my Psychic flew out, and sliced right through the yellow Substitute doll, scattering bits of light purple. Just a second later I blanched immediately, Makkuro's Rock Tomb and Doran's Rock Smash bursted from the seams too, dark-brown energy turned translucent for a second, while red energy soaked my fur to the bone. The latter tore straight through the white doll. “What in the world!?” I screamed.


“T-that's what I'm saying!” the Rockruff yelped, panting ragged. Their massive attack shattered the ground under the crushed black Substitute with a thud.


“Begin!” the Lycanroc ordered.


Swift as a skate, and with Doran’s stupid face on my mind I did another Breath of Mana.


“Now!” Master Hunter said.


“Huh!?” I gasped. Even faster than before, my Psychic diced through the green Substitute doll, the light-purple energy like daggers through weak, soft berries. A torrent of small boulders snapped through the air, and the Rock Tomb swallowed the blue Substitute. I gasped. “Incredible mate!”


Doran stumbled away from the blast, only to careen into the red Substitute. With a slide, the doll tittered over, as the Kubfu's Rock Smash punched the stuffing out of it, pouring like sand.


“I just did that baby!” Doran flexed.


Makkuro laughed. “Not bad legendary Doran, not bad.”


“Looks like you three have plenty of work to do on move safety,” Master Fang said.


The Rockruff scratched his ear as he winced. “Sorry about that.”


“Yeah, my b,” Doran offered.


“Now let's work on something else,” the Boltund explained while her Breath of Mana hand, something I forgot we could do, jotted down something in her scroll, probably continuing our notes.


“Like what?” Makkuro huffed.


“Your other moves,” the Lycanroc cheered, hurrying over to adjust the Substitute's position. “First let's see ‘em one by one.”


The Rockruff groaned. “But what if I can't do it when you say go?”


“It's fine, Hunter will be grading them so to speak.”


“Understood!”


“Go!” the Boltund shouted, her tongue out, playbound as she pointed toward our targets. Unlike last time she dashed in a circle around us. With a soft candy floss taste on my tongue, Dazzling Gleam slowly swirled into the air, light-pink glitter twinkling in the cloudy sky. Light as a feather, pristine white wings, alongside a sky-blue hue, Doran's Acrobatics cloaked their back and limbs.


The Lycanroc across us nodded, tail slowly wagging. “For you Makkuro, let's see how you fare in a ‘real’ fight.”


“Real?”

Master Fang shot out a tiny Stone Edge, straight at their face. “Woah!” the Rockruff only barely spun away, and quickly Dug into the ground with his hind legs. A torrent of sand, semi transparent and crackling shot up from the earth, followed by pieces of soil.On contact half of the chunks of ground fizzled away.

“Nice try!” Master Fang's smaller Stone Edges prevailed, nailing Makkuro in the side. With a grunt, he tumbled to the ground only to come face to face with even more.


“Concentrate Kobi!” Master Hunter reminded. “Next move, go!”


Makkuro's eyes widened, black energy dark-type mana from Bite filling their maw. But, barely able to rend the stones, the Rockruff's blackened teeth flickered. That Bite wasn’t working? I pondered. The tiny Stone thankfully stopped in between Makkuro's fangs and he crushed it. “Too close!” the Lycanroc yelled before they blasted out an even smaller Stone. Makkuro launched their shoulder at the Edge in a Tackle, their body shimmering white light. On contact the rock cracked into pieces, even through the in and out glow on the Rockruff's body.


Master Fang continued the shrunken Stone Edge assault, grinning all the while. Makkuro strained where he stood. Light brown energy crackled into the air before a blurry visage of Rock Tomb phased into view. Only for it to phase out, and the Rockruff gasped, a cough tore itself from his chest and out dribbled something else. Bright red blood, a single drop onto the ground just between the Rockruff's paws and the oncoming Stone Edge. “Halt!” Master Fang yelped. “That's more than before Makkuro, but you'll need better than that!”


Sighing, Makkuro wiped his dripping mouth with a paw. The Rockruff lifted his head up, his maw curled up into a grin.“Three's pretty good heh?”


“Aim for four or more.”


“Aye Tapu!”


Makkuro's trying his hardest, and what am I doing? Let's go for an oldie! Light-green energy pooled at my paw, the four of them tingling as the itch took over, Signaling a Beam straight from my core.


Master Hunter stopped in her tracks, just ahead. “Let me see it!”


This fluttering of bug-type mana fired right out my chest at the command, my itch finally relieved as the Signal Beam pierced through the red Substitute again, leaving a small hole, and it crumpled in twain. Right beside me, a gleam of silvery light flashed before Doran's Metal Claws swiped forward, the three blade-like claws on each paw cleaving through the stitching of the yellow doll.


“One more for the road Kobi!”


I nodded before I dashed forward, black energy coating my paws. Dark-type mana surged within me, just before I reached the blue Substitute I shot open my claws, and Payback sliced it in pieces.


The Boltund chuckled before she walked back over to her scroll. “Now Doran, you need to test out your Detect.”


“How so?”


“Like this!” I leapt at them this time, light purple of Psychic on my paws.


Eyes glowing red, Doran Detected the swath of energy and side stepped.


“Gah!”


The Kubfu blew a razzberry. “Nice try Kobi, you’ll-”


“Ugh!” Doran grunted. “Ho-oh's feather!”In that second Makkuro nailed them straight in the gut with his Tackle.


The two tumbled onto the floor, way to go mate! “Can’t even dodge two attacks oh great and powerful Doran?” the Rockruff asked.


Groaning, Doran dusted off their knees as they rose. “I suppose not.”


For the next thirty minutes or so we practised our moves on a Substitute doll. Eventually Master Fang and Hunter fired weakened attacks at Doran and I, to see if our blocking, dodging, and parrying was up to snuff. Just like Makkuro, we had work to do. That Stone Edge packed a major punch, even as a pebble for Zamazenta’s sake!


I’d have to walk it off. And so I jogged around the court before four familiar presences rolled in. Hurrying my pace, finally a few figures approached from the hill below us.


“Oh, there they are!” a familiar warbly voice called.


“Oh?”


Beyond the fencing, Aron's shiny head came into view. Following him were Fist, Pride, Smeargle, Morpeko, and Impidimp. The Pyroar glanced at the Lopunny and Quilava, thankfully still busy in combat before she let out a sigh. “Behave, you four.”


“Yes, Master Pride.” Smeargle, and the others replied.


“It’s nice to see you all,” Master Hunter said. “Tired much?”


“Yep, we’re washed after those Mystery Dungeon requests,” the Primeape groaned as she fiddled with her backpack.


Master Fang chuckled before nudging the two older mon.“Nice work.”


“Oi Doran, got this for ya!” Fist tossed a black and yellow cloth toward the Kubfu.


Doran caught it, the billowing fabric unrolling and covering their head.“Huh? What's this?” they pulled it away. “Oh, a bag.”


The Primeape nodded. “Yeah, it's nothing much, just figured you'd need one if we found a Mana Scroll.”


“Ah right, as a Kubfu I’d have to carry it… and I’m not as big nor strong as Young Master, so I shouldn’t just have a Mana Scroll in the open.”


“It’ll take time,” Master Hunter explained.


“What about us, we can find all sorts of things too!” Morpeko’s cheeks sparked.


“Fair,” Pride chuckled.


Makkuro raised a question. “Us too?”


“I'll get each of you your own bag in the city.”


The Lycanroc hummed. “Going back soon?”


“We've uh, forgotten to stock up on supplies,” the Pyroar lamented.


The Primeape beside her deflated too. “Running on fumes of a Revaroom too! Need’ta get some good stuff at that there brewery!”


“The brewery?” Master Fang blinked.


Fist patted her abs as she chuckled.“These four can have some mead too if they pay!”


“You’re letting us drink?” Aron asked, eyes smiling as he danced around.


Smeargle waved her paint tail along my paws and right in front of my face, before she turned and did the same to Makkuro. “Eat that Espurr and Rockruff!”she teased.


“Hey!” we yelped.


“But do we even have enough poké?” Impidimp questioned.


“Ya got excited too early, huh?” I chuckled.


“Shut it Espurr, you’ll rub off on the Great Legendary Doran!”


Doran held up their bag and moaned.“Oh no, those four’ll never drink!”


“No! It’s true!” Morpeko cried, growing Hangry, dark purple fur covering half of their body.


Pride placed a paw up to her muzzle with another long sigh. “Alrighty let’s head out.”


“Stay safe Pride, Fist,” Master Hunter said.


“Definitely, we’ll have to meet up, perhaps in the east by the waterfalls.”


“Ah yeah, the waterfalls have some small lodgings we’ll need.”


“Sounds good!”


“Farewell!” And with that once again, Fist, Pride, and their apprentices headed off.


Master Hunter packed up her equipment, and led us toward the small well. We needed a nice heavy drink after all that training. “Let’s head on out to the four Mystery Dungeons that may contain what we’ve searched for, and more,” she said before heading over to the other side of the courts, eastward it seemed.


Makkuro hummed. “I wonder who was after you all in Team Vanguard when you got close to information on the Gears of Mana, and your confrontations.”


“Our Team consisted of fourteen, but only six of us survived. We know who killed eight of us, not their whereabouts.”


“Ah I see, but-”


“We’ll have to talk about that somewhere else for you to learn more.”


Turning my head, I groaned. Just like last time, we aren’t ready to learn about their Teams' past, like who were the other seven fallen besides Kuroshi? The four others alive?


“Sounds good.” Makkuro relented.


I raised a paw to that, humming softly. “Fair point Makkuro, patience.” Thanks mate.


Now out of the Lopunny and Quilava’s reach we ventured into the straylands once again. Quiet tiny hillocks, and mounds of stone far as the eye could see. Not without terrible gusts of wind, courtesy of there being nothing to block it. We huddled in together through the worst of it, my teeth chattering as it practically pierced through my fur.


Doran gasped, as a sharp gale ripped the black and yellow bag from their arms. “Ah, the bag Pride got me!” It rolled in the air and into a thicket, just as I felt the soil shake.


“I’ll help you!” I offered, padding into the brambles of the shrub. Makkuro dove in too. As we searched, my ears perked up. It had to be around here somewhere.Amidst our search the sound of faint claw steps slightly shifted the earth. Who could it be? The footfalls were a little heavy, but just one Pokémon.


“Could a Pokémon come back from the dead?" a large cloaked figure asked, a green hood covering them as they leaned forward, red eyes gleaming.


“What!?”


I all but ran from her out of the bushes, the bag in my maw. Not looking, I collided with the Boltund alongside Makkuro and Doran, the familiar bristle of her electricity loads better than whoever that Pokémon was."What was that?" Master Hunter shot, her ears perked up.


Whoever they are, they weren't a Keeper! This was what Linus meant by a Sentinel’s advantage, easy ambush! The black, green, and gold plaid striped hood on the Pokémon, a Midnight Lycanroc fluttered in the wind. Eyes wide, I glanced between everyone. Wait a minute, I saw them when we were at Saltwater Cliffs yesterday!

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"Well,” the Midnight Lycanroc started, her stubby tail wagging,“if your Primeape friend could evolve, they could."


Master Fang moved in front of Makkuro, Doran, and me. "Excuse me?!" they growled.


"Calm down you deadbeat!”


“Deadbeat?”


“I'm practically bursting with excitement here!" the Midnight Lycanroc howled. Without warning, red energy fierce on her paws, she crashed into the earth just beside Master Fang, Smashing straight through the Rock. She laughed and swung again, and again.


The Midday Lycanroc pulled a chain of Stone Edges and Rock Slides to block the oncoming strikes, each only chipping slightly. “Wait!” they gasped, nearly breathless. “Please forgive me!”


Forgive? I wondered. I tilted my head, as I hurried behind the others.


“Oh you want forgiveness after all you've done?” the Midnight Lycanroc snarled. “Don’t make me laugh!”


Master Hunter charged forward with Thunder Fang gleaming in her jaws and just barely grazed the other Pokémon. “What are you doing here!?” she questioned. No, she begged.


The three's emotions really irked me. A pleading battle of confusion and anger, but also happiness. What's going on?!


The Midnight Lycanroc adjusted her plaid cloak before she spoke.“What am I doing here? I thought you two were dead and I finally found you! Of course I’d see you two!”


“Even after these five long years of us hiding away, for our and Voidlands, even your own safety, the first thing you do is launch attacks at us?” the Boltund cried, teetering on between lines.


“Of course I'm pissed!”


“Truly,” Master Fang said as they cowered toward the ground. “Even if I had a thousand lifetimes, I will never be able to make up for my absence.”


“Not just that.”


“Then what?”


“I can't believe it's really you,” the Midnight Lycanroc sobbed. “I'm so glad.”


Master Hunter nodded. “I'm glad to see you too, just rather surprised. I hadn't planned on it yet.”


“Always planning huh, well with the stuff I learned about Wicked Blow I don't blame you.”


“Would you care to chat?” Master Fang offered.


The Boltund groaned. “I think I need to step away, I'm just so shocked.”


The Midnight Lycanroc shook her head. "Are you sure? I've got info on Wicked Blow for you too, Fother."


"Shara?" Master Fang gasped.


My eyes widened as my back fur arched into the air. Who?


"That's my name!” the Midnight Lycanroc cheered, and her voice brightened, outright jolly sounding now. “The one thing ya gave me that I like!"


The Midday Lycanroc held back a sigh, a smile parting their maw. "Shara, please tell us whatever you know."


“Oh wait, you’re Shara?!” I gasped, my eyes scanning back and forth between the three. Their daughter!


Makkuro stammered for a moment,“Master Fang mentioned you yesterday!”


“Master Fang?” Shara repeated, her brow furrowing. “You mean Tho-san, or as I’d like to say my parent, my mather, pother-”


“Just go with Pops for now, Shara,” the Midday Lycanroc grumbled. “We don’t have all day!”


The Midnight Lycanroc continued. "Well, I got busy a few weeks ago, and managed to get Amelia Weavile to spill her bean…-s on where she was going."


My muzzle shot red. "Ya what?!"


"What was that?!" Master Fang raised an eyebrow.


Shara smirked. "I didn't even realize that was the Head of Wicked Blow Gang Xi 20 until like days after she left."


"Shara," Master Hunter growled, muzzle reddening. "For Moon's sake, where was Amelia Weavile going?"


The Midnight Lycanroc leaned back and folded her arms. "Toward the Heartland, Midori-Bristberg side, definitely there by now, said she much later was gonna go red north to look for something and then twinkling star south."


“What's even mean?” Makkuro asked.


“Red Rock City, and Starlight Beach.”


“Oooh, great places to have a vacay,” Doran said.


“Amelia Weavile's a Wicked Blow gang leader, you muppet!” I smacked the Kubfu over the head. “It's no ‘vacay’ we're after!”


“Bah, I knew you wouldn't take it well.” Shara shook her head. “I'm no fancy intel getter or whatever.”


"Don't beat yourself up, that's quite valuable information!" Master Fang's ears perked up and they walked just a bit closer to Shara.


The Midnight Lycanroc sighed. “If anything Amelia Weavile said that the ‘Diamond Sand Wings’ and ‘Emotion Ruler’ of some Commission would be upset if she didn’t find ‘those new blades’.”


“Who?”


“I've got no idea of the specifics besides some Pokémon above her in Wicked Blow.”


“That’s really good Shara, I’m-” Master Fang paused. “I’m proud of you. I, well you know.”


"Do you want to? You know." Shara wagged her tail.


"Of course!"


I sat back as the Midday Lycanroc paddled over to the Midnight. Once close enough, the two Lycanroc nuzzled up against each other. A hug is ‘you know?’ These Lycanroc are ridiculous for Za's sake.


“Got you all soft again Pops,” the Midnight crouched down to hug her parent. “Soft as a Lycan can be!”


"Okay," Master Fang said softly as they broke away. "I'm sorry. I missed you."


“This is really your family?” Makkuro questioned.


“Yes,” the Midday Lycanroc replied. “Though we were not on the best of terms before the Disruption.”


Doran chuckled.“Members of the amazing Team Vanguard and their Mercenary kid?”


“Aren't Mercenaries really tough?” I asked. “They have small teams and take on crazy foes for crazy coinage.” Linus tried to be one too.


“Not just for coinage,” the Midnight Lycanroc answered, a growl dipping her words.


“Not just?”


Shara sighed. “Do you know what I did?”


“Did something happen?” Makkuro asked, his tail lowered.


“Oh you wouldn’t believe it bud. What I did when I heard-” she pointed to Master Fang, “your body couldn't be recovered because Wicked Blow killed you.”


Doran tilted their head. “What did you do?”


The Midnight Lycanroc's odd red eyes gleamed. “I went out and killed.”


What? “Ya did?” I asked, my tail curling against my legs.


“I killed the first five grunts who wouldn't surrender."


“Oh.” My eyes widened as I took a step back. Openly admitting that she killed Pokémon? Even if they were from Wicked Blow? A shiver rolled across my spine. Wow.


Master Fang whimpered, their body shaking like a leaf. “Shara.”


“I wanted to know how many lives I could trade for yours,” Shara snarled. “Even though I once hated you.”


“Shara!”


The Midnight Lycanroc scraped her claws through the ground, fists clenched.“All those years I hated that you left me with them, that he barely wanted me.”


“Shara please!” the Midday Lycanroc below her cried, digging similar marks into the stony land.


“At one point in life, I knew you hated that I hatched. All of that made me hate Wicked Blow even more.”


Bloody sword. Don't mess with any of Fang's kin for sure.


Master Fang took in a sharp, labored breath. “I’m sorry. I’m sorry. I never should have said that. I wish we didn’t have to fake our deaths.” A whimper crept out their throat. “I hated myself for leaving you with my parents. I know I and your hatch Father weren't ready to be parents but it was no excuse. I should have been there for you. It’s not just you who I left, it was Homura, and Minato too.”


Shara turned away. “You were actually there for them, and they had two other parents. That reminds me,” she cut herself off before her pupils shrank. “Fuck.”


“What?” the Midday Lycanroc gasped.


“You know my hatch Father started fighting for you.”


“He did? I'm glad we're still on terms after so many years, our mistakes as foolish teenagers.”


“Relax.That Houndoom just joined that one Expedition Society nearby, trying to help. He's not going crazy like I did. Oh and I just remembered something.”


“Yeah?”


“I forgot to thank Dad…Kuroshi.”


My thoughts whirled at the idea. Kuroshi was Master Fang and Hunter's mate so it makes sense he was a father, or father-figure to their children, though I wondered more.


“What's this about Shara?” Master Fang gasped, maw still burning red.


“You didn’t know this but he was the last one I talked to. He said he was proud of me and-”


"Alright,” Master Hunter sighed. Tears brimmed her yellow-green eyes. "We,” she held her tongue for a moment, her tears slowing. “We don't need to dwell on that.”


“My bad Mom,” the Midnight Lycanroc said.


The Boltund blinked away her pain. “But more importantly, we are part of the Sentinels Union."


“Sentinels Union?” Shara asked, tilting her head.


Master Fang raised a paw. “Well contrary to popular belief, Sentinels are very important. The five of us Keepers know this very well.”


Master Hunter continued.“It is similar to the League, however we take orders directly from Legendaries, and thus are private.”


“Ah right the League being open was what got us into this mess,” the Midnight Lycanroc sighed.


The Boltund nodded. “Yes, our Team, Vanguard had research that did so to speak.”


“Back to the Sentinels Union,” the Midday Lycanroc explained. “it means we have been on the low, especially training these Keepers here.”


“Funny how I'm the Sentinel here,” Shara chuckled.


“Yep, I always believed in you.”


"And I guess you two are busy with these little guys.”


“Little,” Makkuro whined.


Shara folded her arms as she looked at us. “Disruption blocked, eh?”


I shook my head. “Even though the three of us are unevolved, we're all adults.”


“Still probably younger than me,” the Midnight Lycanroc waved a paw in a laugh. “Still funny there's a Rockruff with ya. Mather, you wish you had another one huh?"


Master Fang sighed, "you haven’t forgotten about Homura and Minato have you?”


My eyes widened. Those two were the Growlithe and the Yamper children that Master Hunter had with Kuroshi, his mark on the world even after he's gone.


Shara took in a winced breath.“Sorry. Ya still want another one?”


“Not in the voidlands that the Disruption has left us in,” the Midday Lycanroc growled, “but never mind that. Shara, where is your partner?"


“My partner?”


“Yes.” Master Hunter gestured to her hood.


“Well.” Shara blushed. “I like to sleep around with girls and femmes like Amelia Weavile, and most folks don't like that, so I'm single."


The Boltund blinked. "I'm talking about your Mercenary Group.”


“Oh.”


I had a question too. “What's your group called?” I asked.


“The Black Clovers!” The Midnight Lycanroc cheered. “I've been working under Captain Obstagoon for nearly ten years now.”


“Now that you've met with us you need to be careful.”


“Understood.”


“There are dangerous Pokémon still after us so, please try and avoid us if you can.” Master Fang gritted their teeth. “You can't be with us. However, because you're a good kid, I'll let you send me a letter: to Guard Fang from Sies Six Branch of the Sentinels Union.”


Master Hunter took a deep breath. “Now hurry on out of here to your mercenary partner, and can you try to keep it uh, under wraps?”


“Sure, I'll try,” Shara sighed, slowly smirking. “My partner's probably pacing around our inn like a lost hatchling, I'll go check on him.”


“I love you Shara.” Master Fang said, blue eyes gleaming proudly, tears and all.


“Huh?”


The Boltund beside them huffed.“They said they love you! And I do too.”


Shara chuckled softly, tears welling in her eyes too.“Love ya too Pops, Mom.”


“Take care!”


Finally the Midnight Lycanroc walked away, far into the reaches of Saltwater Cliffs.


“Now where were we?” Master Fang asked, still watching Shara into the distance.


Doran rolled their shoulders before they spoke. “We found my bag and found your adult kid, what else do we have planned?”


“Perhaps we should search the area in general, there's too many things to pick,” the Lycanroc sighed.


Master Hunter gazed at the slowly darkening sky. “I don't know Fang, we're going to have to settle down and eventually decide.”


Sniffing at a salty breeze, I flickered my clears. Guess we're finally heading out. The five of us continued through the sparse woods amidst the stone, darker clouds rolling in. Tiny creeks, and brookes divided each knoll, big or small along this part, as we made it lower into the earth.


Through the path to the distant waterfalls an odd rift in the stone became visible, light silver shades, where everything around it was a dark slate grey. All bathed in a rather shallow stream.


“Look,” Master Fang called. “A Mystery Dungeon, maybe it'll be a shortcut?”


“It does lead slightly north, shouldn't take too long either,” the Boltund said, looking at her Adventure Guide.A small red brick sign near the division, only read. ‘Shallowstone MD’.


“A Mystery Dungeon? With only the five of us?” I questioned, hurrying to Master Fang's side.


“It’ll be okay,” the Lycanroc urged before they ran into the lighter section of stone, the boundary. “Now come on!”


Once again we entered a Mystery Dungeon, this time a curtain of water blocking the way out. As per its name, Shallowstone consisted of smooth stone, fractured and often covered by waterways, not very deep. I don't want to fight ferals again but if it's to protect those two I'll have to.


Makkuro, Doran, and I went up first and I opted for the right entrance instead of the left.


What awaited down a hallway was a Glimmet. I exchanged Psychic after Psychic against their Venoshock, and took a nasty Ancient Power to the face, but prevailed.Only two Psychics to win this time! Master Fang found the stairs a short while later.


After this we hurried into the next floor, a Litwick wandered above the water, flame nearly exploding once they saw us. Makkuro's Rock Tomb smothered their Ember and his Bite pierced through the Litwick's Night Shade.


Near the end of the Mystery Dungeon, about four or so floors, the three of us h worked together to take out the near legions of ferals that approached, finally saw the last set of stairs we were free. That was my thought until Doran stepped in an odd patch of mud. A sickening Snap rang out as one of their paws got stuck in a Trap. “Wah!” the Kubfu cried as the mud parted, revealing a grey Stunfisk. Doran wrestled through the pain of Snap Trap and a mighty strong Bulldoze before their Rock Smash defeated the Stunfisk.


Finally outside Shallowstones depths we caught our breath. Colder, water dusted breezes filled the air along with a drizzling mist in this part of Saltwater Cliffs. The land itself went higher in selections of earth, where else would those waterfalls come from? Not quite mountainous though, as the only mildly gritty but smooth stones in our path led further between heaven and earth.


“Now let’s go,” Master Fang said, slowly staggering off the lip of a stream.


The journey to greatness often started from a boring trip. One bathed in nature’s serenity and beauty but still boring. Along the empty land a few stray Binacle, and Wingull noticed our approach and fled, just as the ground also shifted slightly. Maybe just their larger kin?


“Master Fang,” Doran spoke, their eyes wide.


“Yeah I know, we’re not alone,” the Lycanroc explained, eyes narrowing, aiming to gaze beyond what I could imagine in the bumpy path ahead.


Master Hunter guided Doran in between her and Master Fang, and just in the nick of time. Four Keeper presences’ slowly made their way through from the south. To my former human palette bitter was dark, beer-battered was ground, smoky was ghost, and rice-cake was flying.


Clad in bleach white scarves, and saddlebags, I saw each Pokémon: a Mightyena, a grey Hippowdon, a Staravia, and an Oricorio ghost-form. The Staravia and Mightyena approached first, while the others pulled out checklists of some sort, eyes ripping through my entire being.


“Good day, we're just passing through,” Master Fang explained, their tone as neutral as possible, despite the drumming I felt in their mind and heart.


Mightyena scoffed and shook his head. “Just passing through, with a Kubfu in tow?”


“Yes.”


“We are with the Keepers Committee,” Staravia said, flapping her wings slowly. “Under orders from Blackthorn, Majesty, and Wyvern to detain any suspicious Pokémon.”


I winced as my claws sunk out. The Keepers Committee? No way! These are bloody Committee blokes, here in the flesh!


Master Hunter gritted her teeth. “We’ll let you know if we come across any on our pilgrimage.”


“Why alert us?” Oricorio chuckled, his beak curved into a grin.


Hippowdon laughed too. “That Kubfu you’re harboring is suspect.”


“Is that so?” the Lycanroc began walking to the trees, and we all hurried behind them.


“Such a shame really,” Mightyena sighed. “And we just got a lead on where the elemental key and lock of flying is.”


What? My thoughts spun.


“You have?”


“That would have been so valuable to trusty travelers like you bunch, right?” A blade of air shot toward Master Fang in that second, right beside it a massive chunk of earth.
 
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