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1-16: Chapter Sixteen - The Statue Killer is Unmasked New

SparklingEspeon

Back on Her Bullshit
Staff
Location
a Terrace of Indeterminate Location in Snowbelle
Pronouns
She/Her
Partners
  1. espurr
  2. fennekin
  3. zoroark
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CHAPTER SIXTEEN: THE STATUE KILLER IS UNMASKED

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. . .. . . Tricky was almost an entire hour late. Which left them just ten minutes before school began. Espurr and Goomy, who had been examining the spider-like cracks in the building's wall, glanced up as Tricky rushed up the hill and messily slid to a stop right into their personal space. She was wearing the blue scarves from her bedroom today around her neck, untidily nestled in her fur.

"Sorry…" she panted, shaking her coat off. Espurr and Goomy, who had been bracing for impact, uncurled themselves. "I overslept. I came here as fast as I could!"

The library itself was just an old, dim warehouse full of dusty old books, so Espurr, Tricky, and Goomy had no trouble slipping in through an unlocked window and searching the narrow, tall, crooked shelves until they found the book Tricky wanted. Rows of dusty tomes leaned over them claustrophobically, and light inside the building was scarce. Espurr could see in the dark better than anymon else, but that didn't seem very productive for a library, she thought.

"See this team?" Tricky shoved a book titled 'Mons and Mystery Dungeons: A Complete History' into Espurr's face. There on the page lay a paw-drawn painting of three pokemon, each labelled "charizard", "wartortle", and "bayleaf". The oils were faded and dulled, but the picture was still clear. "That's Team Go-Getters! They saved the entire world from a meteor almost two centuries ago! Wartortle writes books. I have all of them under my bed."

"What about them?" Espurr asked.

"Well, get this:" Tricky put her front paws on the book and leaned in close. "Wartortle was Human!"

Tricky's loud voice at close quarters rattled Espurr's hearing a little, but all the sudden it all made a little more sense. Just not sense in a good way.

"Don't you get what this means?" Tricky went on.

"That the world's about to be struck by another meteor?"

"No! Wait—" Tricky stuck her nose in the book once more and leafed to another page, where an artist's impression of three more pokemon - "meowth", "litleo", and "shinx" - sat. "Look at these guys!"

"…Also Humans?" Espurr guessed. She and Goomy shared a confused look.

"Nope, just Meowth," Tricky replied. "These guys – Team Ion – were the ones who restarted Time a century ago! And— And—"

She leafed even further into the book.

"Them – Team Anthem – they defeated the Bittercold 50 years ago!" Espurr and Goomy looked at the pokemon – "dewott", and that one Espurr recognised was a pikachu – on the page, painted with those same faded, flaking oils. "Dewott's the Human."

Espurr brightened with recognition.

"Those are the Heroes of Paradise," she said.

"Exactly!"

Tricky snapped the book shut, her tail wagging excitedly. An explosion of dust flew into Espurr and Goomy, making them cough. "NOW do you get it?"

Tricky's ears flopped down as they hacked and wheezed out the dust. "Sorry," she muttered.

Espurr recovered first. She'd caught the trend.

"But if I'm here… doesn't that mean the world is about to be destroyed again?" she asked Tricky.

"That's exactly it!" said Tricky, her tail wagging. "We could be the very first to know! And it explains why the Coneheads are here! They must be working for whoever wants to destroy the world this time!"

She seemed far too excited about that. But it was a reasonable guess. Espurr and Goomy shared a look.

"Perhaps we should visit the jail later," said Espurr in thought. "Ampharos should still be wherever they're holding him. We could get some information out of him."

"Ooh – ooh – I did some thinking about that too!" Tricky yipped. She pranced off, running through the library to an old, dusty table. Espurr and Goomy did their best to keep up.

Tricky perched at the front of the table, climbing on top of it. "I think I know who the statue killer is!"

That caught their attention.

"W-who is it?" asked Goomy.

"It can't be Ampharos," said Tricky. "It has to be somemon at the school!"

"What…" Goomy panted out. The trip here had tuckered him out the most. "B-but how? All of our teachers are…"

"Suspects." Tricky stretched out and slammed her paws down on the table in front of Goomy, expelling more dust that made all three of them cough for a bit.

"A-again?"

"Sorry…"

Waving away the rest of it with her tail, Tricky continued with a grin:

"Think about it! What if the killer doesn't want to kill Espurr?"

"But what other motive could they have?" Espurr pointed out. "They've been killing any guardian that gets assigned to me—"

"And we never asked why!" Tricky interrupted. "Or how!"

Espurr and Goomy went silent as realisation dawned on them.

"If the killer wanted to kill or kidnap Espurr, then, then they had months to do it, right?" Tricky continued. "They didn't even have to kill anymon else!"

"B-but they've been k-killing the guardians instead," Goomy continued.

"Exactly! And – and – and neither Ampharos nor Pancham could know who those pokemon were. So he can't be the culprit!"

Espurr and Goomy nodded. It was starting to make sense.

"The only other pokemon who were close to the murder scenes were the pokemon at the school," Tricky finished. "So it has to be a teacher. The only pokemon who were at every crime and would know who Espurr's next guardians were going to be!"

"B-b-but why?" Goomy asked. "All of our teachers w-were h-here since we were little!"

"Except for Nuzleaf," Espurr said darkly. She didn't want it to be true, but… the pieces were starting to click together. "Does anymon here remember him before he left?"

"Nuzleaf…" Tricky's musing words trailed off into the echoey building. Goomy shook his head.

"T-too old."

Espurr considered her next action. Should she tell them? But now was better than never. Best to just be out with it.

"Nuzleaf offered a day ago to be my new guardian," Espurr blurted out.

Tricky and Goomy looked at her like she'd grown another tail.

"What?"

"Why didn't you tell us earlier?" Tricky demanded.

"I was going to say it after school let out," Espurr said, unable to stop herself from fidgeting awkwardly.

Tricky and Goomy just looked concerned. The awkward fidgeting increased.

"It's not like I couldn't take the boat back here when I wanted, so I thought…"

"Forget the boat! If Nuzleaf is the killer, then he's going to take you tomorrow," Tricky stressed. "You have to stay here! You have to convince somemon else to take you."

"B-but what if he k-kills that pokemon?" Goomy asked. Espurr and Tricky clearly hadn't considered that. "It c-could be anymon now."

"Goomy's right," said Espurr, folding her arms. "If I try to get away, he'll be suspicious. Everymon at the school could be in danger. And if he's not the killer, then it could tip the real one off. We have to know for sure."

"And when we do?" asked Tricky.

"Then we confront him," said Espurr firmly. She was tired of running and slinking around. "We face him and the Coneheads before he can plot anything, and we end it. We have to. Today."

"Together?" asked Tricky. Goomy also looked at her.

"Together," agreed Espurr.

A distant sound met their ears – the clanging of the pingy school bell.

"Alright, everymon front and centre!" The distant, shrill sound of Vice Principal Watchog's voice drifted in from outside the window, catching their attention.

"Berry crackers!" Tricky hissed. "We're late!"

Jerking into motion, Espurr, Tricky, and Goomy scrambled to get out of the library, tripping over as few books as possible on the way out.

"D-do you t-think he noticed we're g-gone?" Goomy asked as they hid and peeked out from behind a bush. Class was being held outside today. They could see Watchog pacing in front of the group.

"Duh! Watchdog's taking role-call today!" Tricky hissed as they snuck up. "Of course he noticed!"

"Let's sneak in and hope he doesn't see us," suggested Espurr. In her experience, Watchog tended to have the observational capacity of a rock. Having an ego as large as his did that to you.

"Alright, listen up!" Watchog barked, returning to his militaristic pace of the outdoor classroom. Espurr, Goomy, and Tricky sneakily filed in behind the group of students, hoping not to be caught. The other three teachers were sitting on seats behind him, looking like they wanted to be anywhere else. Simipour was snoozing. At the edge of the classroom, where Watchog usually surveyed them, Krookodile stood with a clipboard. Espurr glanced at him uneasily, observing his usual aura of lime-green annoyance with life.

"The final exam before Summer Vacation isn't a cakewalk like the others," Watchog continued. "You're going to be heading into the school's very own mystery dungeon, and you will need to rely on the things taught in my class to clear the dungeon with a passing grade. We only use this dungeon for the exam, so you will deal with things you've only been taught about in books and school."

He suddenly pivoted towards the class, leaning in intensely with a scrutinising eye.

"First rule! Teams of three! Why? Go!"

Deerling raised her hoof. Watchog straightened up and waited expectantly for an answer.

"Three is the proper number for a mystery dungeon team, sir?" Deerling guessed.

"That's correct!"

Blitzle and Ponyta, at Deerling's side, looked extra smug.

"Second rule!" barked Watchog. "Dungeon bag! What's in it? Go!"

Shelmet got that one, hopping up and down.

"Two oran berries, a pecha berry, and an escape orb," he answered proudly. "Easy."

"Wrong!" Watchog barked loudly, nearly jolting him out of his shell. "You forgot the elixir! The paralysis wands! The warp seeds! What's it gonna be like if you're in a dungeon and you run out of those things?!"

Shelmet shrunk back into his shell with a squeak, only his eyes visible. Espurr decided Watchog was enjoying having the floor a little too much.

"Dude," whispered Pancham, nudging his shell. "You actually participate in these things?"

"Third rule!" Watchog returned to his pacing. "What do you do if you get cornered by an enemy? Go!"

Tricky hopped up and down in place excitedly.

"Attack them!" she called out. The sudden spike of green Espurr saw shoot out of her said she'd realised drawing attention to them was a mistake way too late.

Watchog's gaze turned to them, and Espurr froze. Watchog narrowed his eyes, but he didn't say anything.

"Correct. You'll find five bags of supplies in the Principal's office," he said calmly. "Then we'll draw lots for teams. Go on! Get out!"


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"I can't believe I'm with Pancham!" Deerling stormed. "And Shelmet! They're both creeps!"

Watchog had quickly shooed them all out of the clinic, and then they went around the back and down the other side of the hill. There, the woods beyond shimmered, refracting the light in strange ways. It seemed to drive away the light, casting the trees beyond in darkness. The faintest hints of something rotting danced in the air, making Espurr's nose flatten with the regret of being able to smell on that horrid day.

"I'm afraid the teams were drawn randomly," Farfetch'd said, fiddling with his leek. "Even if you didn't get the pokemon you wanted to be partnered with, you'll still be expected to work together as a team."

"Well, can't we have a redraw?" Deerling complained. "I work better with Blitzle and Ponyta."

"No redraws!" Watchog cut in. "You know as well as I do this test takes all day," he told Farfetch'd. "And if one student gets a redraw..." He let his sentence hang in the air to draw out the impact.

In the corner, Pancham and Shelmet did a victory dance.

Since Deerling was with Pancham and Shelmet, and all the other teams had been drawn, that left Espurr, Tricky, and Goomy on the final remaining team.

No-mon had wanted to team with them. There was an aura of collective relief around the other students.

Audino gave each team one bag filled with all the supplies they'd need, under Watchog's pretense of 'all real exploration teams having only one supply bag'. Espurr, Tricky, and Goomy were handed the ratty bag that Espurr had carried around.

Tricky strongly insisted she was going to carry the bag this time, and eventually all five teams were at the foot of the dungeon, ready to begin the test.

"Just… be careful, okay?" Deerling said to Goomy in the couple of minutes they had before the test. She shot a quick glare at Espurr and Tricky. Goomy reluctantly nodded, and Deerling backed off with a huff to join Pancham and Shelmet.

"Everymon ready?" All heads turned as Watchog and the other teachers walked into the clearing, followed by none other than Principal Simipour himself.

"It's only right that I should be here to see all the students off for the final exam of the Spring Semester," he explained, seeming to notice most of the school was shocked to see him awake and standing.

"Now, I don't wanna hear anything about fights and foul play, you hear me?" Watchog barked. "You encounter each other in the dungeon, you just walk. Away. Your mission is to capture one of the five red flags placed at the dungeon's anchorstone by myself and Farfetch'd last night. Once you have your flag, use the escape orb placed in your bag to leave the dungeon. The quicker you return with your flags, the better your grade. Now go! Shoo!"

Watchog stood back and shooed them all off into the dungeon. Deerling's team went first, and once the entrance had finished warping around the fourth team and had returned to normal, Espurr's team followed.


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"You know we need a team name, right?" Tricky eagerly pranced about with the exploration bag slung over her back as they walked through the school dungeon. The thick, dark trees extended above them, high into the abstract treetops. The hallways were dark and overcast. It was familiar. "Maybe something like the Adventurous Exploration Squad! Or – ooh – the 'Dungeon Destroyers'!"

"How about Team Troublemakers?!" Pancham yelled back at them. Somehow, they had spawned just ahead.

"Suck it, Pancham!" Tricky bellowed back. Her voice echoed down the shadowed corridor.

Goomy looked frightened of the woods around him, but Espurr was worried for a completely different reason: This was it. This was the forest! The one she had woken up in just a week ago. The one where she had been hunted down by the beheeyem. The one where she had broken her arm. It had been the school's very own mystery dungeon!

And now she was back. What if the Coneheads were back too? A dark thought rustled in her head: they had never discovered where the Coneheads were hiding.

What if they had never left?

She didn't want to risk another encounter if she didn't have to. Espurr cast a look behind them, just in case the entrance to the dungeon might still have been open.

It wasn't. And using the escape orb to magic herself out of the dungeon meant a failing grade from Watchog for sure.

"What's wrong?" asked Tricky as they walked. Espurr was looking around, trying to find any sign of something having been disturbed recently. Dungeons didn't preserve changes for longer than a day, right? So, if anything was out of the ordinary, one stone leaf or blade of grass…

"It's here," said Espurr. "I woke up here. This is where I met the Coneheads."

"They were here?" Tricky asked.

"L-look…" Goomy was looking at a large section of the wall that was different from the others – a tangled mess of plants and roots that had been turned to stone. The three of them rushed over and looked at it. The bag dragged on the ground after Tricky.

"That's new," said Espurr, walking over to inspect. She planted her paws on the stone. It was cold and hard. She looked over at Tricky and Goomy, who had also run up.

"What if they never left?" she asked them. "Whoever's behind this could have been keeping the Coneheads here all this time! It explains why they found me so quick. And no-mon ever uses this dungeon outside of the exam – who would have looked?"

Tricky squirmed uncomfortably at the thought.

"B-but if that's true…" said Goomy. "What if they're still in the dungeon?"

"We have to tell the other teams!" gasped Tricky.

"And the teachers," added Espurr. "At least, the ones we can trust."

She took the bag from Tricky and started to ruffle through it. Once she found the escape orb, she pulled it out and looked at it. Should they go back? What could the teachers outside the dungeon do to call off the exam?

"What do we do?" asked Tricky.

Put on the spot, Espurr came to a decision. She replaced the orb, took the bag from Tricky, and slung it around her neck.

"We should make sure the other students are safe first," she said. "If the Coneheads really are here, they'll be looking for us. And whoever's behind it all might be with them."

Tricky and Goomy nodded. They set off into the dungeon with renewed spring in their step, on a greater mission.


~\({O})/~

Carrying the bag made Espurr feel safer. She clutched its strap like it was a stuffed doll, or a magic shield that could protect her. A heavy magic shield, but she could cope. She thought she saw Goomy shivering a few times, but for the most part he was busy just sticking with her and not getting himself lost.

Tricky constantly pranced ahead of Espurr and Goomy, peeking around corners for dungeon 'mon and giving them paw signals when the coast was clear. Espurr thought it was dramatic, but it did save them from dungeon apparitions they would have otherwise walked into.

The Dungeon Anchorstone, Tricky explained, was the patch of land a mystery dungeon formed around. An anchorstone could be a cave or a rock or a tree or a grassy field, but it would always remain the same, no matter where it ended up in the dungeon.

"Everything in a dungeon is made from parts of the anchorstone," Tricky went on, "So you always know what to look for when you find it!"

"But if everything around us is made from the same parts," Espurr asked, "how will we know when we get there?"

"Well…" Tricky began. "You'll just… You'll know it when you see it! And there are the flags too. Unless Pancham got to them first…" she spat.

Espurr, Tricky, and Goomy all stopped short at the sound of distant talking to their left.

"I-is it a dungeon 'mon?" Goomy asked.

"No, it's…" over by the corner of the hallway ahead, Tricky craned her neck and squinted her eyes to get a better look.

"…Holy mystery dungeon. That's Pancham's team!" she quickly scampered back to where Espurr and Goomy were standing. "And they're heading this way!"

Sure enough, Deerling, Pancham, and Shelmet were heading straight towards them. Pancham had a threatening saunter in his step, and Espurr's tail bristled. She had the creeping feeling this wasn't going to end well.

"Are you sure we should be doing this?" Deerling lectured Pancham as he strode towards Espurr, Tricky, and Goomy. "You heard what Watchog said – walk away!"

"What Watchog doesn't know won't hurt him," Pancham replied. "This is revenge for the mines."

Shelmet was too busy trying not to get left behind to add anything of substance to the conversation.

"Well, well, well." Pancham came to a stop in front of Espurr, Tricky, and Goomy, who were all standing their ground at the dungeon crossroads. He folded his arms and tapped his foot. "If it isn't the pests. It seems like we've come to an impasse."

"Just drop it, you big meanie!" Tricky yelled at Pancham. Espurr stepped up.

"We don't want a fight," she said, standing between them. "You're all in danger. We think there's somemon in the—"

"You really think I'm gonna fall for that?" barked Pancham. "You're not getting out of this that easily."

Espurr had to resist slapping a paw on her forehead. How dumb could…

"We'll fight you if we have to!" Tricky barked. "Just listen to us!"

"As much as I hate to agree with Tricky, she's right," Deerling said. "You guys all know what Watchog told us. Just walk away!"

"Y-yeah! Listen to Watchog!" Goomy added in from Espurr's side.

"Y-yeah," Pancham mimicked, making a crude imitation of Goomy's voice. "L-l-listen to Watchdog. You guys take your licks, and maybe we'll return your flag in one piece."

"You don't want to do this here," Espurr warned him.

"Yeah, no," shrugged Pancham, cracking his fists. "I really do. You're gonna say you were roughed up by dungeon 'mon after this, right?"

Espurr looked quickly to see if they could flee, but aside from the small, narrow corridor they had come from, there was no other way out. They were in a small, crooked hallway that only went two ways. Pancham had them trapped. Espurr narrowed her eyes and resisted the urge to growl, taking a reluctant attack stance. Did everything have to end with a fight?

Tricky stepped up, staring Pancham dead in the eye. She took an attack stance.

"Guys?" Tricky asked, her tone making it clear that it wasn't a question. "When have we ever listened to Watchdog?"

There was a brief moment of silence, as all the students tried to think of a single time that they had ever listened to Watchdog.

"…Good point," Pancham said, and then he rushed forward, his paw rushing with black energy, and punched Goomy clean across the wall.

"DUNGEON WAR!"

Tricky's declaration of war was cut short when she received a rock to the snout, and then everything became chaos. Tricky attacked Pancham. Shelmet attacked Tricky. Pancham attacked them both. Espurr tried to get to Goomy, who was currently trying to make sense of being splattered across the dungeon wall. The exploration bag she was carrying bounced heavily against her side as she ran, and it was hard to keep her balance and dodge the stray debris and attacks from the ongoing fight at the same time.

"Stop this!" Deerling shouted, stamping her hooves into the ground. "Stop this right now! Pancham!" a loose Ember from Tricky hit her square in the face and sent her reeling back.

"U-ugh…" Goomy was still a little dizzy by the time Espurr reached him. She quickly made to grab him – looked for a tangible place to grab – then finally settled for one of his slimy flailing paws. Quietly, they both huddled behind a rock until the fighting subsided.

"That's it! You guys made me do this!" Deerling took a battle stance. She took a deep breath, then charged headfirst at Pancham, Tricky, and Shelmet. All three of them were knocked apart by Deerling's headbutt. Tricky fell on her back, spitting out an ember into the endless canopy in surprise. A tree branch came falling down, and Espurr realized almost too late it was coming down upon her and Goomy—

She did the first thing she could think of. She shunted Goomy out of the way.

Espurr was lucky enough to avoid being crushed by the branch. Her bag was not so fortunate. The contents were crushed under the branch's weight, landing right next to Espurr. There was a bright flash, and then Espurr, Tricky, and Goomy were gone.

The dust settled. Pancham, Shelmet, and Deerling picked themselves up.

There was a moment of silence, as they took in what they had just done.

"Aww,—"

Pancham then said a word that made Deerling gasp in shock.


~\({O})/~

Dim light slowly trickled into Espurr's eyes. Groggily, she sat up and rubbed them. What happened?

Her surroundings came into focus. She was in a forest clearing, just like… when she'd woken up the first time.

Uh oh.

Espurr stood up quickly, pulling her bag close and looking around. The place was silent and uniform, the canopy abstract, the woods snaking off endlessly.

This must have been the dungeon anchorstone.

There was a pile of pink goo on the ground, slowly slithering together as Goomy gathered his bearings.

"Goomy?" Espurr asked, rushing over and helping him to his feet.

Goomy unscrambled himself and shook his head.

"W-what happened?" he asked.

Espurr's bag rustled with glass shards. She connected two and two quickly.

"I think we broke the escape orbs," she said. "Something's wrong. We're in another part of the dungeon. Where's Tricky?"

They looked around. There was no sign of her.

"W-wait," said Goomy. "Th-this is the anchorstone. Shouldn't we grab the flag?"

Espurr looked around. This very place made her fur stand up on end. She couldn't tell why, but there was something very wrong here. "I don't think we should stay," she said. "There's something wrong about this place—"

She abruptly cut off as she trudged through the dungeon. Espurr and Goomy both yelped as they came face to face with a stone statue!

Espurr jumped back, pulling Goomy with her, then calmed down when she saw it wasn't moving. She crept up to the statue, carefully inspecting it. It was of a small, two-legged dog trapped in mid-run, dangly feelers flying behind it and a terrified look on its face. She stepped back and looked at it solemnly. Was this another of the Conehead's victims?

"I-it's another pokemon, isn't it?" asked Goomy. Espurr nodded.

"I think so," she said softly. "Do you recognise them?"

"N-no," said Goomy. "I-I know the species, though. It's a r-riolu."

"Hey," said a voice from the mist.

Espurr and Goomy turned around, hearing the sound of footsteps coming towards them. Espurr recognised that voice – it was Nuzleaf!

But at the same time… she had a bad feeling. A really bad feeling.

"Hide," she hissed to Goomy.

If Goomy was going to argue it, he didn't after hearing her tone of voice. He managed to roll out of there quick, leaving Espurr standing alone. She watched as a figure got closer and closer in the mist, eventually revealing Nuzleaf striding through.

"Heard ya got lost," he said. "You were out for a while. All the teachers are lookin' for ya. You alrigh'?"

Espurr pushed down her fear, gave him a quick smile, and dusted off her fur. She kept her guard up.

"I think I am," she said. "I… was out for a while, wasn't I?"

"Sure were," said Nuzleaf. "You took one helluva nap there."

He turned around, his green cape swishing behind him. "Well, come on. I think I saw the stairs thataway. Can't keep your friends waitin', can you?"

"Speaking of friends," said Espurr, who didn't move. "Where are they? Are Tricky and Goomy alright? Did you see them?"

"Tricky and Goomy?" asked Nuzleaf. He kept going onwards, Espurr following at a distance. "Yeah, sure. I saw 'em at the finish line with the rest of the class."

Espurr knew that instant he was lying. Her heart sank with disappointment.

"Are any of the other teachers in the dungeon?" she asked, silently looking for a way to bolt around and get back to Tricky and Goomy.

Nuzleaf was hesitant to answer. Espurr could almost sense the gears turning in his head. Was he trying to make up a convincing lie?

"Dunno," he said. "I went in first. Was just so worried, ya know? I'm sure the others'll catch up 'n all soon enough."

He kept trudging, but must have noticed that Espurr wasn't following along.

"Aint'cha comin'?" he asked, turning around. Espurr, who was so close to making her escape, mentally cursed. She was hoping he wouldn't notice her slip away…

"I think I might wait for the other teachers," said Espurr, thinking quickly. "It's better for us all to go out together instead of letting them search, right?"

Nuzleaf turned around fully.

"Well, that's just crazy talk," he said. "I'm a teacher. I'm supposed to keep ya safe an' all. Can't just let ya run off on your own, can I?"

Espurr took a step back. She clutched her bag. Her entire body felt tight and coiled, ready to spring away at any moment.

"You're right," she said, trying to disarm him with a cheery smile.

The moment Nuzleaf turned around, Espurr silently darted off into the woods. Only the rustle of her bag gave her away. She had to get to Goomy and find a way ou—

Something moved in front of her. Espurr skidded to a stop, eyes wide. She saw a flickering yellow light, and a massive, dark figure towered over her. It was a conehead!

She gasped. Espurr brandished her bag and prepared to smack it away—

"I wouldn' do that if I were you."

Nuzleaf was behind her. He walked up and folded his arms, relaxed. With a wave of his fingers, the conehead backed off, remaining silent.

The jig was up.

"Who do you work for?" asked Espurr, turning around and not skipping a beat.

Nuzleaf hummed.

"Smart girl," he said. "You don't miss a beat."

"Answer the question," said Espurr, trying to sound as level as possible.

Nuzleaf laughed. He leaned against a tree.

"This ain't class, kiddo. I don't think you're in a position to ask questions."

"It was you, wasn't it?" continued Espurr. At this point, she was just stalling for time. A quick glance at the woods, disguised as a look back at the Conehead, showed that Goomy must have snuck away. "You were the one who summoned the Coneheads. They killed those 'mon for you.

"Yes, of course it was me," Nuzleaf said dismissively. "Who did you think it was – long-neck?"

"You mean Ampharos?" asked Espurr, tightly clutching her bag. While she stalled for time, she frantically looked for any way out. She so hoped Tricky was alright, and that Goomy had managed to escape… "He was fighting you?"

"Yes, Ampharos," Nuzleaf said sharply. "He likes to stick his nose in places it doesn't belong. Of course he was fighting me."

He snapped his knobbly fingers. "Come on now, Espurr. You were my brightest student, you're smarter than this. It was all I could do to make you think he was the one behind the murders."

"How come?" asked Espurr. "Why murder all those pokemon?"

"So I could get to you," Nuzleaf said. "Isn't it obvious? Couldn't let them take you away, now."

There was a sudden rustling in the distance behind her. Espurr looked back, her heart jumping in fear as she saw a third black figure with a pointy cone hat standing thrice her height in the distance behind her. It didn't move a muscle, but she could feel unseen eyes trained on her.

"They won't bite," said Nuzleaf calmly. "As long as you don't run."

It took everything in Espurr not to bolt right there and then.

"But why do you want me?" she asked, backing up slowly, trying very hard to keep the waver out of her voice. "I'm just a schoolkid. None of us are useful to you."

"Don't sell yourself short," said Nuzleaf. "You're far more than that. And He sees it."

"Who's he?" asked Espurr coolly.

"All in due time," said Nuzleaf. He relaxed his position against the tree.

"Y'know, we're not so different, you an' I," he said.

"I'm not a murderer," said Espurr matter-of-factly. She took another step back. "Or a kidnapper."

Nuzleaf psshed. "I don't take pleasure in that," he said. "Not any more than you do."

He leaned forward.

"What I mean is, we're both from back there. That home you wanna get back to so badly."

Espurr's eyes widened.

"How do you know about that?" she asked in shock.

"Why, I've known from the beginnin'," said Nuzleaf. "Why do ya think I came back? Enrolled at the school just as you got here 'n all? You thought that was a coincidence?"

Though Espurr had taken a few steps back, they were dwarfed by Nuzleaf's steps forward.

"So you're Human too?" she asked. Somehow, that came as a larger shock than anything. There was more than one? Her thoughts raced. Had Hyrdreigon been lying to her?

"Yepadoodles," said Nuzleaf. "Grew up on a ranch."

He crossed his arms.

"When I first landed here decades ago, I was just like you. An aimless kid lookin' to find their way in the world. Village took me in, raised me like one of their own, but I never felt home. Never could make friends with any of 'em. In both worlds I was a loser, a midget, a freak. Bullied by others. I didn't have a lick of power to my name in the world where everyone has power. I thought I was broken. But then I met Him.

"At first, He didn't know why I was here. He thought I was an anomaly. But He listened to me when no-one else would. Gave me the power I needed to step up and become a somebody. Didn' need nobody but myself to do it. And now look at me."

He spread his arms, and black power crackled in an arch between them like lightning. "That's power."

"Why are you telling me this?" Espurr asked.

"Well, to be honest, it's because I've grown quite fond of you over this semester," answered Nuzleaf. "And while He wants you dead, I think you're worth more than that. I think you could be powerful. Believe me, Espurr, I don't wanna do this anymore than you do. What's the point? Kill ya, and fer what? When I could teach ya instead?"

Espurr did some of the calculus in her head.

"You'd call off the Coneheads?" she asked.

"Of course," said Nuzleaf. "No-mon else needs ta die. You just come quietly now. You can see your friends again. Ampharos will take the fall, nosy little bugger. We won't even hafta leave the village. You'll just have to do a little favour for Him every once in a while, nothin' big. But think of everythin' you'd gain!"

Espurr couldn't. She wouldn't. She had to find a way out of this, even if that offer was… couldn't she weasel out of it later?

"He senses a darkness within you," continued Nuzleaf. "A fear of rejection and failure. Those are things He could fix. Just like He fixed them for me. I used to be small. I used to be just like you. But He made me what I am now.

"So don't doom yourself to this," said Nuzleaf. "Don't fight the losing battle. Come with me… come with us. And perhaps, when our work is done… He might send you home."

With that sentence, Espurr's resolve swayed slightly.

"You could send me home?" she asked.

"Of course," said Nuzleaf. "If that's what ya want. And all you have to do, the only thing you have to do, is let Him in."

There was still that pull, that want to go back home to the familiar and dull, where there weren't creatures trying to hunt her and terrifying new situations on the regular. But… somehow… nothing he'd promised seemed to tempt her. Not power, not threats, not even wanting to go home.

Espurr's eyes narrowed. She gave him a small smile.

"Thanks, but I think I'm better off where I am," she said. "Sorry."

With that, she swung the bag and let go, sending it flying in the direction of the conehead. She leapt out of the way, letting the bag smack the conehead in the face and sending its attack careening in a random direction.

"Get her!" roared Nuzleaf.

He pointed at her, and the second conehead moved like lightning, blocking her path. Espurr's catlike reflexes kicked in, and she bounced in the other direction, ducking behind a tree as a blast of dark power soared towards her and turned the trunk to stone. She ran past Nuzleaf and headed for Goomy's hiding spot. ducking under the third conehead as it swooped out of the forest and running towards Goomy. She reached him and backed up, the coneheads lunging for them—

Nuzleaf caught Espurr by the neck, raising her up. Espurr's reflexes suddenly gave out, making her go limp and flop over. What was happening? She could only watch in horror as he kicked Goomy away like a ball with a grunt and held her out in front of the Coneheads, who had gathered and started to charge up a blast…

Espurr could feel her heart thumping in her chest, her body still limp. Goomy was still discombobulated. Was this the end?

"Get away!"

A yell from left field caught everymon's attention. It was Tricky! Espurr's heart leapt for joy. She'd never been so happy to see that face!

Tricky bounded forward, flames lashing from between her jaws, jumped up, and attached herself to Nuzleaf's face, making him yell and try to claw her off. His grip loosened enough for Espurr's reflexes to kick back in, and she pulled herself out of his grip. Nuzleaf shook and spun and grabbed and tried to peel Tricky off. Eventually he succeeded, grabbing her by the tail and throwing her on Espurr and Goomy. The three of them tumbled back and fell into a pile.

Nuzleaf stood over them, angry and threatening. Behind him, a conehead charged an attack…

"That's it," hissed Nuzleaf, who was bleeding from Tricky's clawing and spitting. Behind him, the Coneheads stood. Espurr noticed they were charging an attack behind him. Did Nuzleaf know?

"Y'all had your chance," Nuzleaf spat. "I'm gonna make this painful—"

The Coneheads' attack charged and released, heading straight for Nuzleaf—

It was over before Espurr knew it. When she opened her eyes, the dust settling, Nuzleaf was gone. In his place was a stone statue, freezing his expression of rage into place forever.

Espurr, Tricky, and Goomy panted in a pile, looking up at it and still trying to process what happened.

Distant voices floated in from beyond the anchorstone. The Coneheads looked up.

Audino and Watchog approached from a distance. They saw Nuzleaf's statue, frozen in a threatening posture over them. They saw the Coneheads.

And then in a blink, the three shadowy figures had booked it, disappearing into the dungeon's depths with a ghostly whine. Audino rushed over to Espurr, Tricky, and Goomy, pulling them into a quick hug and looking them over.

"Are you okay?!" she asked them. Watchog stood over them, eyeing them for injuries.

"Yes," Espurr panted. "Yes we are."

As she, Tricky, and Goomy huddled into each other, Espurr looked past Nuzleaf's remains into the dungeon, searching for any sign of the Coneheads.

They were gone.


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Music of the Week!

The Face of Voldemort – John Williams
 
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Ambyssin

Gotta go back. Back to the past.
Location
Residency hell
Pronouns
he/him
Partners
  1. silvally-dragon
  2. necrozma-ultra
  3. milotic
  4. zoroark-soda
  5. dreepy
  6. mewtwo-ambyssin
  7. vulpix-ambyssin
each labelled "charizard", "wartortle", and "bayleaf"
Waaaaaaaaaaaait a tic. Isn't that just—
That's Team Go-Getters!
Yeah, okay, this is the anime version of the Rescue Team plopped into the gameverse. I guess I took the name and applied it to the duo from the Rescue Team manga, so I'll let you off the hook for the royalties.
"meowth", "litleo", and "shinx" - sat
A team of all cats? Wait.
Team Ion – were the ones who restarted Time a century ago!
Okay, this has to be a Warped Skies reference or something, right?
"That's exactly it!" said Tricky, her tail wagging.
Tricky seems remarkably excited for the end of the world.
"Except for Nuzleaf," Espurr said darkly
Oh. No, she's already going there.
We face him and the Coneheads before he can plot anything, and we end it
Yeah, considering this thing's not even at the end of book one, I'll take the under.
that left Espurr, Tricky, and Goomy on the final remaining team.
Gee, how convenient!
You encounter each other in the dungeon, you just walk. Away.
Narrator: They will encounter each other in the dungeon and absolutely not walk away.
like the Adventurous Exploration Squad!
I feel like this is a WiiWare reference.
Tricky's declaration of war was cut short when she received a rock to the snout, and then everything became chaos
True, although perhaps the description of said chaos was a bit too skimmed. You describe 'mon as simply "attacking" one another. for a good few sentences.
It was of a small, two-legged dog trapped in mid-run, dangly feelers flying behind it and a terrified look on its face.
Noooooo not the aura pupper. :screm:
What I mean is, we're both from back there
What.

No, seriously, what? My constant bringing up of Nuzleaf was memeing on my part. I wasn't expecting them to just... literally jump straight to accusing him. And it comes from Tricky of all people. (And she's right, to boot.) From there the train seems to completely derail. Nuzleaf does ambush them with the beheeyem. Makes a claim to being human and making a Faustian deal with Dark Matter. And he wants Espurr to take the same deal. But then the beheeyem turn on him? I... feel like, even if the wheels are going to completely come off the wagon and the journey is about to go on a wildly different course toward the same destination, there's no way Nuzleaf is actually gone. He'll be back somehow. Maybe the beheeyem sensed the teachers coming and this is all a diversion Nuzleaf could use to escape and plan for some point later on. Then again he does pretty much go completely absent early into the story only to reappear for his betrayal. So, uh, if the betrayal's happened now, then he doesn't have much of a significant narrative weight. So, maybe something bigger and crazier will come along. But what it is I can't say.

And I know you used Harry Potter music, but as far as "similar but not true PMD" vibes go, these SMB Wonder tracks fit the uneasy atmosphere and Nuzleaf's monologue, respectively.
 

Spiteful Murkrow

Busy Writing Stories I Want to Read
Pronouns
He/Him/His
Partners
  1. nidoran-f
  2. druddigon
  3. swellow
  4. lugia
  5. quilava-fobbie
  6. sneasel-kate
  7. heliolisk-fobbie
Heya, fired up the authorial hitlist tonight and figured that I’d chip away at a couple names and rack up some points in the process. Figured that now was as good a time as any to come back for a bit more of Psychic Sheep’s v2 in… Giratina, is that you showing up in this chapter?

Whelp, only one way to find out for sure:

Chapter 1-4

The Daily Pelipper – Your one reliable source of news

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Since I remember how reliable™ the news outlets were in the v1 of this story. Though calling the newspaper the ‘Pelipper’ feels like a cute and very “PMD” thing given how ubiquitous they are in the canonical games as mailmon,

BREAKING: Current Prime Minister to tour country, ending in South Ophria

Which is in… uh…

- checks map -

… Not!Baja California. Duly noted.

Baram Town – After a successful two terms in office, Prime Minister Grovyle Rufus, Conservative Coalition leader, will be capping off his time as head of government with a celebratory tour of the country – ending in its southernmost province, South Ophria. Late this May, the grovyle will tour its largest city, Crossings, before ending in Serenity Village, the largest town west of the mountains.

Oh, so that’s how you’re justifying Nuzleaf dipping into Spanglish for this story. Which, you know what, fair enough. Though it makes me wonder if you kept Hippopotas’ German accent or if he speaks with something else.

A successful two terms in government is an unusual feat in recent memory for a Prime Minister – rarely has one been able to fully complete more than one term without meeting some ill fate before the end. Many of the superstitious believe that the position is cursed, ever since the radical candidate Ninetales Winslow suffered a crippling defeat over twenty years ago.

Oh, it’s like the Curse of Tecumseh, except it doesn’t check out for 20 years at a time.

… Also, I just realized that Rufus is a Tory. Are there also other Canadian party expies in this story like an NDP stand-in?

The administration is reported to have made this decision as a ceremonial passing of the torch, as the government will leave Baram Town, Luftand, in the summer of next year and settle in Crossings, South Ophria for its next term and next Prime Minister.

I’m just going to go ahead and venture that the government’s run out of Cloud Nine. Since that would definitely make moving the capital from term to term convenient for the government.

>dat art

Wait, is that Watchog who’s leading Tricky, Espurr, and Goomy there, or…?

Slowly coming to, Espurr felt dizzy.

She tried to sit up, yawning and rubbing her eyes with both paws.

Wait, her broken arm was healed?

Well, that one’s definitely different there.

She twisted her left arm in curious surprise, watching it move around just like new. The shock was cold and slow-moving. Then she snapped awake, realising that she wasn't in her bed. She yelped and jumped in fright.

Darkness cast its cloak upon her from all sides, blotting out the walls and the roof and anything that was lying about in the background. Even the straw bed she'd drifted off on was gone. Instead, she was laying on the ground in the middle of a pool of shallow water that didn't feel wet. She scooped her paw into it out of curiosity, marvelling at how it came out completely dry. Despite how dark it was, she could see her reflection perfectly, as if the sun was illuminating her fur coat. Where was she?

Oh. Yeah. That would explain why it is that her arm’s healed given that this is one of those trippy and ominous dream sequences like the v1 had.

And why was she out of her bed, again? Espurr was quite sure this was setting a new record for supernatural kidnappings somewhere, and it was starting to get on her nerves. If someone was going to kidnap her anyway, the least they could do was show themse—

Sudden light from behind lit up the not-wet-water with a warm blue glow. Startled, Espurr quickly stood up and whirled around, immediately shielding her eyes from what was a sphere of too-bright light floating above her. She took a few steps back, squinting, preparing herself to run if she had to.

"Hello?" she asked, her voice wavering.

Espurr: “Um, you know what? I take it back! I’ll skip on the ‘showing yourself’ part!”
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"Hello," said a voice pleasantly. The sphere of light descended towards the water, forming into something more solid. It took the form of a glowing, three-headed dragon, which Espurr briefly recognised from an old mythology book she'd read.

I’ll take that as confirmation that Espurr originated from a world without Pokémon that lived among her. Though hello Voice of Life(?). [ispolier]I mean, I have some reasons to doubt that it’s the real thing from a recent chapter art of yours, but that’s a story for another day.[/ispoiler]

"Who… are you?" she asked, too taken aback to ask anything else.

"Me?" asked the dragon-thing, cocking its middle head. "Oh, well, I'm usually called the Voice of Life. Most call me Hydreigon. You may also call me that. Your name?"

Just saying, I distinctly remember that Dark Matter and its minions in the v1 had a thing for doing impersonations, so…
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To say nothing about how in Gates, the Voice of Life being impersonated by a third party is literally a major plot event.

One of the few blank spaces in her head. She still couldn't remember her name…

"People call me Espurr," she settled on, eyeing the ripples in the water.

"Hmm…"

Hydreigon: “I was expecting something a bit more… distinct. But whatever, ‘Espurr’ will make things nice and convenient.”

The large, three headed dragon seemed to hum out of one head, then the next, idly floating around Espurr in the black expanse almost like he was a balloon. He settled in front of her with a splash, the large draught of air blowing her back a little.

"So!" he began. "Questions. Answers. You're probably wondering why you're here."

Oh boy, this is going to be like that one scene from the Simpsons movie where the EPA guy explains why Springfield’s under a dome, huh?

"I'm wondering a lot of things," said Espurr bad-temperedly, folding her arms. Was this the person who'd brought her here? "We could start with why I'm not in my bed. Either of them."

"You are in your bed, actually," said Hydreigon with a three-headed grin that almost looked like he thought she'd make a tasty snack. "You're dreaming quite deep! It's the only time I could reach you." All three heads suddenly looked sheepish.

Okay, yeah, I’ll take the under that this actually being the Voice of Life, since I can see that reaction there.

"I was hoping you'd ask why you're here," admitted the left one.

"Can you answer that too?" said Espurr.

This looked like it was going to be a while. Her eyes still on the softly-glowing hydreigon, Espurr sat down in the water, her tail perking up behind her. She might as well get comfy.

Uh… no. While I admittedly have the advantage of being a bit genre-savvy to your story, you really, really should stay alert right now, Espurr.

The hydreigon cleared all three of his throats loudly, then the middle one began to speak in a regal voice: "Every so often, this world faces a catastrophe, which threatens to swallow it up whole. You are hope. An outsider, brought from far away to save everyone from the destruction of the world. If you succeed, your name will be written and sung in the pages of history for eons to come!"

Not mentioned in this sales pitch: That one time where Hydreigon basically turned loose at least 20 randos into the Pokémon world and only succeeded because of one guy that somehow didn’t die.

Let’s not even get into how if you’re sticking relatively close to the beats from v1, that Espurr isn’t the only human that was brought to this world at the moment.

"What if I don't succeed?" asked Espurr.

"Well, none of you have failed so far," said Hydreigon. "Those are good odds!"

Okay, yeah, barring some AU chronology antics, this isn’t the Voice of Life. Since the real deal would not say that short of blatantly lying.

"Well, what if I just want to go home?"

Hydreigon looked a bit taken aback.

"Come again?" he asked.

"What if I just want to go home?" Espurr repeated, some tiredness from the past few days cracking through her voice. "I have a maths exam tomorrow, and the material wasn't easy to memorise, and I really want to finish the book I was reading."

Hydreigon: “Um… you do realize that humanity’s kinda been extinct for 10,000 years by this point, right?” ^^; ^^; ^^;
Espurr: “WHAT?!
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As Espurr talked, words and letters seemed to materialise above their heads, foggy, crisscrossing in streams. None of them made sense, but among the nonsense she did recognise the equation from Problem Four on the practise exam.

It was wrong. Again.

Huh, so she’s literally seeing words materialize above them. I wonder if we’ll ever see a depiction of what this looks like, since it’s a pretty trippy thing to imagine.

"Um, it was bookmarked in a really good place and I don't want to lose it," she continued. "And I have three more books to read after that. One of them is supposed to arrive at the library next week and I've been waiting for it for a year, and…"

Small missing word moment there.

She tapered off when the Hydreigon didn't seem particularly receptive. In fact, he looked rather guilty.

That wasn't a good sign.

No, no, the real bad sign was like 10 paragraphs ago, though admittedly an amnesiac with zero context as to this world’s history would be unlikely to appreciate why it was a bad sign.

"I'm trying to say, you can get someone else, right?" she finished carefully, then looked up at him in hope.

Silence. Hydreigon looked even more guilty.

"Right?"

"I'm afraid…" Hydreigon's right head tapered off. He gazed into the deep, dark blackness beyond. "I'm afraid we don't have that luxury this time around."

Can’t tell if true or lying here. Though I’ll be paying close attention to his dialogue to see if there’s any hint as to whether or not
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will be a thing again this time around.

The world seemed to stop turning. The streams of numbers and letters crumbled away into dust.

"Wait," said Espurr, her mind suddenly scrambling. Her tail bristled and curled into the fake water behind her. "Wait. What do you mean?" she asked, her voice rising in worry and desperation. "If you could bring someone in, why can't you take them out again? Oh, can't you find someone else? Please?"

"I'm afraid I didn't do the bringing in," said Hydreigon's middle head, bowing towards the water below. "And time is running out. By now, the powers hunting us will have figured out how to track and intercept journeys between worlds. How do you think They were able to get to you before we could?"

Oh, well that’s ominous. Though who is ‘they’ here according to Hydreigon?

The meaning of They registered in Espurr's mind immediately. Suddenly she could see them, ghostly, blurry images shrouded by the fog of the dream, hunched shadows with pinprick eyes and cones for heads.

"You mean the Coneheads?" she asked, leaning forward.

Hydreigon looked pensive for a moment, then nodded.

"They have many instruments to carry out their dark bidding," he said darkly. "These… 'coneheads' may be one of them, yes."

Can’t tell if this is an AU VoL by virtue of this being an AU setting and not actual Canonworld or an elaborate ruse by Dark Matter, but either way, I’ve seen enough from this conversation to know that he’s not a trustworthy actor here.

It was… a lot to think on. Espurr didn't know how she felt right now. Except annoyed. Very vividly annoyed. If nothing else, that shone through. She could have personally picked out three students in her class who would have been better for this! The least they could have done was ask first—would you like to go off to the spooky fantasy world and maybe be a hero but probably die?

Somehow, a lot of students in her class would have leapt at that one.

I mean, if the recruiting entity was selective on shared details of what this journey would entail, they’d probably have been able to get the entire class to jump for things.

"So," said Hydreigon, breaking the silence. "I'm quite sympathetic to your plight. If, by the end of this, you wish to be taken back to your own world, then so be it. But as it is, we're in quite the sticky pickle, you see, and while you're here it affects you more than most…"

He trailed off, looking slightly desperate. Espurr had to wonder just how in-control he was right now. Probably not very much. If someone looked a little desperate, they were usually very desperate.

Or deliberately playing mind games with you. I suppose you could try and walk and find out which of the two Hydreigon is doing here, but Espurr’s personality doesn’t strike me as the type to do that by reflex.

But then, how much sway did she really have? She wanted so much to be back in her bed, her real bed, right now, but she also didn't want to be hunted down by weird conehead things. And if that meant playing hero for a little while…

"So if I help you get rid of 'Them', you promise you'll put me back afterwards?" said Espurr, settling for what sounded like the best deal she was going to get.

Hydreigon, relieved, nodded with all three of his heads. "That's the ticket!" he said.

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"Shake on it." Espurr held out a paw. Hydreigon looked unsure of how to handle that, before Espurr remembered that didn't seem to be a gesture here again and she should stop doing that. She took it back awkwardly. Hydreigon simply nodded his heads instead.

"You have my word."

Which again, was totally worthless if nothing else for not shooting straight on just what Espurr’s odds at the moment were. Since I remember what the failure rate for recruited humans in Gates was.

"Then it's a deal," said Espurr.

And just like that, she felt a bit better. There was something she had the power to fix and change now. It sounded daunting… but in honesty, she'd take that over having no idea or direction at all.

Yeah, this is going to age terribly down the road in this story, I can already tell.

"So, what do you know about 'Them'?"

Huh, scene cut already? Guess we’re fast-forwarding through the exposition.

Not very much, it turned out. There was 'something something ancient', 'something something evil', but Hydreigon was apparently just as much in the dark as she was. Which made her feel really wonderful about the deal she'd just made. With a three-headed, floating dream dragon. Had he really pointed her in the direction of nowhere and hoped it'd work out? What had she just been roped into?

Oh hey, I found your ancient evil here:

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Oh well. There was still some leeway for her to hope this was all a bad, very elaborate, multi-tiered dream. Maybe she'd read a bit too much fantasy before bed. Maybe, if all else came to nothing, she'd find a way to get out of here on her own. How far away could she possibly be?

And then you woke up and found your arm broken again.

If there were clocks here, they probably would have struck nine in the morning. The sun had already risen, the chilly morning breeze had scattered, and the local birds and squirrels had long stopped squabbling over the branches and tree-nuts. Large, impressive clouds rolled over the sky, turning into fog as they met the slopes of the faraway mountains. If she was home right now, school would have long since been in session.

Ah, I see there are vanilla animals in the v2 of this setting again. Duly noted.

"Look sharp, class!"

The fifteen other students lounging around and talking with each other in the classroom quickly took their seats when loud, portly Farfetch'd walked in and took his place at the teacher's desk. Behind him, a blackboard swung gently in the breeze from the branch of a low-hanging tree. He picked up a leek half his height, then stomped it into the ground like a cane.

Tricky: “... Espurr, were you dozing off at your desk? How on earth can you sleep like that when everything’s solid wood?!”
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Espurr: “... Curses.” >.<

"We have a new student joining us today," he began, clearing his throat. "I'm told some of you met her yesterday, but just for formalities, she'll introduce herself now."

He looked over at Espurr expectantly. Until now, she'd been standing off to the left, where the others couldn't see her, and frankly she'd have liked to have kept it that way. She wasn't a spotlight person.

Small verb tense tweak there.

She moved over to the blackboard, stiffening up and facing the rest of the class. Fourteen sets of eyes stared back at her. She wanted to die.

Farfetch’d: “Well, Espurr? Were you going to get started?” ^v^
Espurr:
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"Good morning," said Espurr, the words sounding unnatural and stale. She really truly hated public speaking. "My name is," – a pause to stomach the inertia – "Espurr. I wish to become a student at the Serenity Village School, and I hope that we can all become good friends and classmates in the future."

Silence swept over the classroom so harshly an already-fidgety Espurr could hear the thirty bugs in the immediate vicinity going about their business. A single "pfffft" emerged from Pancham's side of the classroom. Her tail and ears flattened. The entire affair felt so awkward she wished she could zap away into the creepy woods and live there forever.

Try looking over towards Tricky’s end of the classroom, just saying, Espurr.

"Very well done!" Farfetch'd broke the silence and clapped his wings together in feathery applause.

He was the only one.

Espurr: “Seriously, Tricky? You’re supposed to be the supportive one!” >.<
Tricky: “Look, how was I supposed to know that you wanted me to clap? You looked like you were squatting on a burr the entire time!” .-.

Trying to move on, he crossed the final name on the board out with a leek. "There's an empty seat next to Tricky right there. Why don't you take that one?"

Of course she got the seat next to Tricky. And Tricky couldn't have looked happier.

I honestly am surprised that that didn’t reflect in Tricky’s behavior during Espurr’s introduction. Unless the idea was that Espurr didn’t see her until Farfetch’d pointed her out, which if so, might merit more explicitly pointing out such as a passing mention that Espurr had to turn her head to see Tricky here or something like that.

"Isn't this so cool?!" she whispered excitedly the moment Espurr sat down, her tail wagging furiously. "Not only do we get to attend the same school and detentions, but we get to sit right next to each other too!"

Espurr: “Fantastic.
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Espurr thought she heard Watchog mutter something like "Of course, put the troublemakers together, not like I care, I'M just the Vice Principal…"

Oh, so that is Watchog in the chapter art, huh? The ears are a little off-model for Watchog, but I distinctly remember him sticking the three other characters in the art with detention in the v1 around this point of the story, so that’s my reflexive assumption there.

Farfetch'd cleared his throat again, thumping his leek into the ground.

"Now… is the class ready?"

The class was not ready by any means, but Farfetch'd continued anyway.

I sure hope there’s not any standardized tests in this setting, since otherwise the scores these kids get are surely going to be abysmal.

School passed quickly. It was shorter than Espurr's old school, and almost none of the classes were objectionable enough to be miserable. Farfetch'd had a sense of timing and humour, and Audino was patient and kind throughout her own class, which was about identifying and using the native types of fruit. Watchog's teaching style, however, was akin to an angry, snarling great dane who was somehow qualified to teach outdoor safety.

That must be a sad commentary on how prepared everyone else in this school is to go into a Mystery Dungeon if Watchog is the one most qualified to give this lecture.

"Sit straight!" he barked at Pancham, who had been relaxing in his seat with his feet on the desk.

"Yeesh, teach," Pancham grumbled, sitting straight.

Um…

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Was he just transparently kicking back and watching the clouds or something? Since I’m not sure how he’d manage to pull that off with that desk layout and leg structure.

"Any more of that and it's detention," Watchog growled back. "Don't think your pops will save you forever."

Espurr saw Pancham sit up and make a surly, rude gesture under his seat. She urgently nudged Tricky, who had been playing dead as a form of class protest, so that Watchog's punishing eye didn't wander towards them.

I mean, I suppose that Pancham does have enough fingers in order to give the good old-fashioned Hawaiian Good Luck Sign. Clearly his parents didn’t raise him all that well in between tending to their business interests.

School let out during the highest point of the afternoon, when the sun was at its hottest. If the heat was overbearing, a full coat of fur only made it worse. And it was hot like Espurr had never experienced it before: a baking, humid warmth, scorching like the sun itself had veered down to earth. It was in this soup-like heat that Vice Principal Watchog declared it was time to serve detention.

Cute foreshadowing there.

"Now, Principal Simipour doesn't hold the same high standard to punishment that I do…"

Watchog marched down the beaten dirt pathway behind Espurr and Tricky through the village's eastern archways and towards mountains, forest, and vast fields of farmland. Goomy, unable to properly keep up, slimed behind them as fast as he could.

I… think that you skipped over the part where Tricky and the others actually got led along from school, so the sudden jump between “School let out” to “Watchog marched down the beaten dirt pathway” felt really sudden. It’s something that could potentially be fixed with like an extra sentence somewhere in this section or in the preceding 2-ish paragraphs.

"But your detentions for the following week will be personally overseen by the law-upholding gaze of yours truly, Vice Principal Watchog," Watchog announced, his voice bursting with self-absorbed pompous flair. "And I assure you, I. Will. Be. Vigilant. In my—Sharp left!"

Wow, such vigilant, many competence.

The three students wearily stopped trudging down the path at Watchog's command, instead taking a left off the path.

"Mr. Watchog?" Espurr panted, brushing away the dust Watchog had unwittingly kicked into her fur from behind. Not that it did much; her tail dragging on the ground was picking up twice as much dirt.

"Vice Principal Watchog," Watchog muttered. "What is it?"

"Why are we leading?" Espurr asked between heat-strained breaths. "You have all the directions..."

Because he’s an egotistical midwit even in the canonical PSMD narrative?

Vice Principal Watchog sputtered. "I… I have to make sure you don't run off while I'm not looking! Wouldn't be the first time we've had deserters…" he growled, staring at Tricky, who was suddenly very interested in the flowers.

Lol. He really did have to stop and think of an excuse. I remember him also doing this in the v1 of this story, but it’s still such a great character-establishing moment.

"Sharp right!" he yelled a second later. Everyone perplexedly took a sharp right.

"Now we're just back on the path," Tricky observed obnoxiously, her tone gleeful. "Do you even know where you're going, Mr. Watchog?" she asked cheerfully.

"For the last time…" Watchog sputtered, his face red, "It's Vice Principal Watchog! And yes, I took a wrong turn. It’s all straight from here."

Some small phrasing tweak suggestions, and I can already see the transparent [smugzel] face on Tricky’s muzzle right now that she’s not even trying to hide at the moment.

After a few more minutes of silent endurance in the sun as Watchog danced around them frantically, they finally arrived at the berry fields: long, open rows of bushes stretched far into the distance, ending at the neatly-clipped trees that marked the beginning of the forest. Mountains, swathed in rolling fog, loomed in the distance.

"Here we are," Watchog sighed with the enthusiasm of a grumpy swadloon. "The three of you will be spending detention picking this week's lunch. Here's a list from Principal Simipour, it has what you need to pick and where." He handed out a list each to Espurr and Goomy, who took it with his slimy paws. Espurr looked over at Tricky, who was distracted by a large, hovering insect.

Tricky:
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Espurr: “(Um, Tricky? You should probably look over at Watchog before he notices you.)” .-.

"I expect hard work from all three of you!" Watchog continued. "If I catch any of you slacking, I have permission to extend your detention periods… into Summer Vacation," he finished with a grin and a sharp glare intended just for Tricky.

And this is why nobody likes you, Watchog.

Tricky, who had been doing something Espurr couldn't make heads or tails of up to that point, didn't like the sound of that. She gulped, and began to physically drag Espurr off to the Strawberry Section by her good arm.


Goomy accidentally dropped his copy of the list as he slimed after them. He watched it blow off into the fields helplessly, carried away by a sudden gust of wind.

"That Watchog is evil!" Tricky gasped once they were at the gate of the fields, and Watchog was out of earshot. "He wouldn't cancel Summer Vacation, would he?"

Uh… yes. He’s absolutely petty enough to do that just from his official characterization.

"I-I think he would," Goomy stuttered as he slimed up, his eyes peeled to the paranoid weasel loitering about stiffly in the distance.

Watchog: “I’m a Meerkat!
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Tricky: “Whatever!” >_>;

Tricky grabbed one of the wicker baskets resting next to the large gate in her mouth, entering the fields with a hop and a bound. "Epferr! You're on reading dudie!" she yelled back through the fields, oblivious to any of her classmates' plights. "Goomy, help me pfick berrpfies!"

Yuuuuuup, that’s definitely Tricky, alright?

Then once again, she left Espurr in the dust. Magenta annoyance tinged her vision once again as she glared—could Tricky be any more carefree? Both Espurr and Goomy traded looks. Goomy looked at his slimy paws that weren't fit for picking berries in any way, shape or form.

I actually wonder if Tricky still has a version of that part of her backstory this time around. Since if so, uh… yeah, this will once again be a lot more depressing in retrospect.

"Want to trade?"

Espurr handed her list out to Goomy with her one good arm, heading over to the remaining wicker baskets.

Goomy gave Espurr a grateful nod, bobbing his head readily and taking the sheet.

Huh. So that’s why this chapter’s always been a thing in this story. Since it really is a pretty “this is who the characters are” moment for most of the core cast.

"Okay… I- It says we need 200 strawberries from t-the orchard…" Goomy began, following Espurr through the gate and into the field, where Tricky was already busy several rows down shoving countless berries into her basket without rhyme or reason.

Bruh, how on earth is this even legal right now? Especially when you’d think that base morph Pokémon would be more susceptible to heatstroke.

He panted as he went, drooping, his antennae floppy. It looked like he was suffering from the heat far more than Espurr was. Which made sense, she guessed, looking at him. He was slimy…

To say nothing about according to ‘dex fluff, Goomy can dry out without sufficient hydration. :copyka:

"I-I remember when it use-used to rain most of these days," panted Goomy as they picked. "It-it wasn't so hot the-then…"

"It used to rain in the summer?" asked Espurr, filling the basket at a faster rate than he was.

"A-all the t-time," said Goomy, using his paws to pluck a berry from the bush. "Now it's ju-just s-s-sun. I d-don't like the su-sun."

And the foreshadowing is back. So we are getting some version of ‘DM’s yeeting the planet into the sun’ plot from Super.

"That makes two of us," said Espurr, putting the basket where it was easier for Goomy to reach. "It only rains a bit where my family moved. I wish it did more in summer."

"W-where d—"

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"I'm Espurr," interrupted Espurr quickly before Goomy could finish. "You?"

I think it might have made sense to more explicitly show Espurr realizing “whoops, shouldn’t have said that” and then try and change the topic of conversation through her internal thought process, but that might just be me.

"G-goomy," said Goomy. "Tha-thanks for g-going in after me yesterday," he awkwardly added.

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"What were you doing in there?" Espurr asked.

"A d-dare," Goomy said. He deflated a little. "I-I thought that if-if I brought the paper b-back, then they'd…" he shook his head. "Ne-nevermind."

[ ]

"No, go on," said Espurr.

IMO, some combination of the two bracketed sections here feel like they’d benefit from expanding out to show more of Espurr’s thought process. Especially if there’s a part where she’s inwardly having something like a “wait, what” moment.

"They said they'd stop treating me like a little kid," said Goomy. "But I didn't bring it back alone, so…"

"Well, I think it takes guts to take on the dare in the first place," Espurr replied. "A little kid wouldn't have gotten as far as you did."

I can already see Tricky just casually going:

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in the background right now.

Goomy brightened up a bit after that, picking the strawberries faster. They moved on to a new bush.

"H-hey," he said. Espurr, concentrating on holding the now rather heavy basket up with her one good arm, looked at him.

"W-wanna be friends?"

Espurr:
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“Uh… not that this isn’t flattering, but isn’t this a bit fast since you’ve known me for all of two days-?”

The question made Espurr stop in her tracks. No-one had asked her that before… well, except for…

But Tricky wasn't here. Visible shaking and the squawking of some distant crows in the bushes several rows over told her they were out of earshot.

Well, she did like Goomy, quite a bit more than Tricky…

Shots fired. Even if I suppose that Tricky really was more than a little overbearing in the early parts of the v1 of this story, and she hasn’t exactly changed much shtick-wise here.

"Sure," she said. She made to extend her paw out to shake on it, but stopped herself at the last second. Goomy gave her a friendly nudge instead.

She was getting the hang of this.

D’aww…
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Dear Diary,

Wrote Espurr in her head while she lay on her belly in the straw bed in the dark room.

I think I'm starting to get the hang of things here. It's not that different from home, really. Everyone's still animals, and I suppose me too for now, but there's still school and days and nights and crabby teachers. Just like back home.

I mean... yes. That's basically life in 95% of PMD stories out there. Even if the 'just like back home' won't last for too-long plot-wise.

A pause. Espurr rolled onto her back, ignoring the dull pain in her arm, staring up at the bare wooden ceiling. She felt like sighing.

I will get back home. I have to. I promise I will. If what Hydreigon said is true, then I shan't be here much longer anyway.

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I don't know what I'm supposed to stop yet, but there have to be leads somewhere. I'll start looking tomorrow. The sooner I find it, the sooner I can leave. And this can all go back to being a strange, awful dream.

Her mind, ever contrarian, chose that moment to greet her with a flash of Goomy. Did she want it to be a dream?

Depends on how much she (dis)liked her family, I guess.

Of course she did! She had a life to get back to. Her brain was just being stupid. Besides, she didn't make friends. She chose not too long ago. With those last dying thoughts, she rolled over and stared at the wall, letting her thoughts circle into strange, nonsensical loops as she drifted off to a pleasant, deep sleep.

Enjoy it while it lasts, Espurr.

Knock-knock.

The wind of a spring gale howled outside, rustling the leaves in the trees and cloaking the pitter-patter of the endless rain. The sound was comforting to old 'mon Abernathy, who had been there to witness many spring seasons over his long life and intended to stick around for at least a good twenty or thirty more. There hadn't been as many storms in recent years as there were in the raichu's youth, which only made this one a welcome sight. Hopefully the grass and flowers, which had grown yellow and sickly over the years, would brighten up now.

Can’t tell if this is this story’s version of the Gates Hero’s partner or if this is a completely unrelated figure.

Knock-knock.

It came to Old 'Mon Abernathy's attention right about then that the banging he heard from the door downstairs wasn't the wind rattling his doorstopper.

It came again.

Knock-knock.

Abernathy: “... Is someone knocking at my door? In this weather?”
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Somemon persistent enough to knock three times must want something. He was expecting important visitors in the next few days, but he didn't think they'd come so quickly. And certainly not in the middle of the night… If that was them, he'd best get up and fetch the door. So the elderly raichu pulled himself out of his warm bed, and hopped down the wooden steps of his house to see who was knocking.

"Who is it?" he asked as he swung the door open. The face he expected was one of an audino from Serenity Village, the one that was about to be connected by ferry.

Oh, Audino gets all the way out here normally?

But instead, the figure that greeted him was of somemon tall and lean, dressed in a shadowy, green cloak, hidden by a veil of darkness. They were silent. Abernathy couldn't see their face.

Oh, hello, Ampharos.

"Hello?" he prompted, trying to get an answer out of the strange figure. Silence. The silence was beginning to unnerve him, making him think that perhaps this spring shower wasn't a sign of good fortune after all.

Still, the figure remained silent.

"I'm going to shut this door now," said old Abernathy, his voice laced with caution. "If this is some kind of prank—"

The figure suddenly stepped to the side deftly, and the last thing old 'mon Abernathy saw before the blast hit him were multitude flashing lights of red, yellow, and green.

Well, scratch that about that being Ampharos. Though I suppose that’s the last we’ll be seeing of Abernathy, since I remember what those lights corresponded to in the last version of this story.

Also, wait, how are the linked songs in these outro meant to be listened to in relation to the story text, anyways? Are they essentially “credit themes”? Meant to be listened while reading specific parts? I get that there’s some sort of relation, but I’m unsure what.

Well, that was certainly a blast from the past, since a good deal of this chapter was basically making me go:

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While reading it. That said, it’s definitely a lot more polished than I remembered the original version of events being, and the added sequences with Hydreigon and Old ‘Mon Abernathy at the end definitely kept things feeling fresh for readers coming back from the v1 of this story. I take it that the primary point of this chapter was a “getting to know you” exercise for the characters plus teeing up massive foreshadowing for readers who know their Super / Psychic Sheep v1 who can pick up on things in between the lines that aren’t openly said on their face in the chapter’s different exchanges.

There honestly wasn’t a ton that struck me as being flawed about this chapter. There were a couple spots where I didn’t agree with the wording choices or noticed some slip ups with verb tenses. The biggest things that I noticed were ultimately a matter of authorial preference where I noticed a few parts that felt like they’d be good candidates for points to delve into Espurr’s inner thought process a bit more, and one spot where I thought you rushed a transition between two physical locations a bit. Otherwise, things were very polished and well-done.

Kudos on the chapter @SparklingEspeon . I know that you’ve had a bit of an uneven experience with getting new chapters out the door the past year, but for what it’s worth, the stuff that I’ve seen so far is really good. I don’t know if I’ll have the time to come back for more before Review Blitz is over this year since my reading list is… uh… something, but I’ll definitely be keeping an eye on this since it sounds like your v2’s rapidly approaching a plot watershed, and it’ll be curious to see where you wind up diverging from your first outing along the way.
 
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StolenMadWolf

Loony Moony
Pronouns
She/They
Welp, this took longer than planned, but coming in literally in the first few hours of 2025, I’m coming in with a Review Blitz! I have read part of this fan-fic before it got rebooted, and since it’s been a while since I’ve read through this fic, I figured I’d start from the beginning again. It’s fairly similar to what I’ve seen in the past story wise, but I think there are enough smaller differences within the story itself that it’d probably be worth restarting anyway. As a disclaimer and reminder, I tend to focus on worldbuilding, characters and plot over grammar and the writing itself, but I’ll try and cover both bases.

Okay, first of all. WOW. The formatting on the TR version of this looks genuinely impressive. It looks really professional and neat, I can’t complain about that in the slightest. The individual bits of art only help things further with the story, so I have to give my full praise about that.

So, I’ve focused on the Prologue, then Chapters 1-3. The prologue is new, and damn does it change my perspective on the setting. Whilst Baram and Serenity Village still sound familiar, it looks as clear as day that it’s a semi-original world now. But I’m getting ahead of myself. It’s an interesting situation for the leader of the region in question, in a big airship no less, to get a visit from Mew of all people, who is all pretty casual about being dead and all, then goes on to direct the PM to our new human. It does flip things over on it’s head a bit.

Moving onward to the next chapters, and it’s not only interesting to see Espurr’s former human life, but it’s also nice to see her reaction. I’m guessing she isn’t really aware of Pokemon? Given she’s giving names such as Coneheads for certain species, which offers plenty of opportunities to confuse and give Espurr room to learn key details. Espurr is also clearly out of her depth, not only with her new body, but also with encountering the… hmm, you know what, let’s stick with Coneheads for now. We’re going with Coneheads. There is also her starting location, which completely blows the start of Super out of the water. A dead, fog filled forest with the infamous mist and wind being in totally evil and laughing mode? No wonder the poor girl is so terrified, and this gets carried over to her rescuer at the same time. You also successfully change up how a Mystery Dungeon looks and behaves here from the typical corridors and rooms approach without making it overly complicated. All in all, that already gets me engaged.

Chapter 2 pretty much occurs in a very similar way to what I’ve seen before. Espurr wakes up with a broken arm which isn’t going to be healing anytime soon and soon enough, she meets the very familiar Tricky… who is just as absolutely barking bonkers as her Super counterpart. Nearly breaking her legs by jumping out of a tree. She does seem a touch darker out of the gate with actual thieving on top of her half mindless antics and insane levels of hyperactivity, which are on full display here. That got me chucking alright. Less chaos in the town square than what I recall this time. We do also get the beginning of an introduction to the wider cast, at least amongst the kids themselves. I already recall most of them not liking Tricky at all, even Deerling and Goomy, but it’s still clear how desperate Tricky is for a new friend or someone to hang with, especially given how much everyone else doesn’t trust her. Meanwhile, Espurr is still suffering some kind minor breakdown. She’s preteen and clearly is wondering what on earth is going on with her to the point she’s desperately trying to find out where she is in the world and get in contact with folks back home… it’s going to be a bit of a shock for her when she finds out that she’s in a different world entirely.

Then we have our natural transfer over to Chapter 3, and soon enough, we end up going face to face with the fact that underneath that bubbly personality, Tricky can be disturbingly sly and even manipulative. She ends up luring Espurr to the dungeon despite needing to head back to the school, but despite not wanting any part in an impromptu rescue mission, her better nature gets the better of her, and soon she’s making her way into the dungeon with Tricky, who is still hyper as heck. I wonder what she’s like once she ends up burning out all her energy with her… I’m guessing AD-HD? We also get a bit of a glimpse in Goomy’s head, and we get a good idea on how a nine year old would actually end up thinking of things, as well as reacting to situations which is very realistic – well, one type of realistic. Espurr and Tricky alone get the other realistic demos! The entire dungeon is over very quickly… not even counting the fact that it seems to just have one floor, but it’s still something that bothers me a little bit.

And of course, the school staff are almost exactly like the ones from the game, and the distinction in their personalities is clear as day. Watchdog being bonkers himself is always refreshing, even when the guy embarrasses himself.

Grammar wise, I have no complaints. The dialogue is very good and there is a clear voice and tone with each character just based on that alone. Show and don’t tell is very much in full force, and something I think is excellent, with only a little bit of telling as needed. The chapters themselves feel just about the right size and don’t feel padded out. All in all, when combined with the exceptionally good formatting, I have to take my hat off for that. Top job! It’s still early days on the plot, with less world building and more introducing us to the main cast, but each chapter has a purpose and critically, the story is engaging, despite being a Super Mystery Dungeon inspired fan-fic.

I don’t know how different this rebooted version is compared to the original, but all in all, it looks really good! Hope to try and read more!
 
1-17: Chapter Seventeen - We Live Another Day New

SparklingEspeon

Back on Her Bullshit
Staff
Location
a Terrace of Indeterminate Location in Snowbelle
Pronouns
She/Her
Partners
  1. espurr
  2. fennekin
  3. zoroark
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CHAPTER SEVENTEEN: WE LIVE ANOTHER DAY


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. . .. . . The entrance to the School Forest warped and spat out Audino and Watchog, followed by Espurr, Tricky, and Goomy. All of them looked quite shabby and beat-up. They were met with the faces of Principal Simipour, Farfetch'd, and the rest of the students. Pancham was there too, looking rather cowed. He couldn't meet their eyes.

"They wanted to wait out here for the students' return," said Simipour, the same sleepy smile overtaking his face. "Who was I to stop them?"

Krookodile stood in the background, hmming and taking notes.

"Come on," said Audino, shooing the three of them forward. "Move along. We've got to get these three to the school clinic."

As Espurr trudged along with the others, carrying her beat-up bag with her, one thing she did notice was that for once in his life, Watchog looked concerned instead of sulky.

"Did we pass?" asked Tricky as they went up to the school clinic. Her voice slumped with exhaustion. They'd all been through the wringer. It was the only thing any of them could think to say.

"I don't know yet," said Audino, leading them on.

They were the only team without a flag, after all.


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They spent the rest of the day getting cleaned up and resting in the clinic. Audino refused to let them go until the late afternoon. Espurr bathed and then went through the long process of drying her fur out – she had to get it cut – while watching Tricky fight the very notion of cleaning off.

"Come ooon!" the fennekin whined, struggling and flailing as Audino pushed her towards the bath. "I'm fiiine! I haven't taken a bath in six months and no-mon's complained!"

"You haven't taken a bath in how long?!" questioned Audino sternly. Tricky nervously grinned.

In the end, the fennekin was made to bathe for twice as long as Espurr and Goomy, who sat in the wooden crate happily soaking up as much moisture as he could. Goomy seemed to like baths.

When Tricky finally emerged from the bath, she was peeved and soaking wet. The irate scowl on her face was almost as droopy as her fur, dripping in strings off her flat tail and ears. It made her look almost half her size.

"Don't. Say. Anything."

Smoke was curling from her ears. She growled and padded outside, shaking herself off with a fiery puff.

"You three should count yourselves lucky," Audino warned, giving them each a checkup to make sure they were okay. She locked away her medical supplies in the school clinic's cabinet. "I'm amazed you got out of that with as few injuries as you did. You just might be the single luckiest kids I have ever seen in my entire career. A bill of clean health for all three of you!"

Espurr could tell that Audino was shaken up about Nuzleaf, but whatever she thought, she didn't discuss it in front of them.

Later in the afternoon, the other students' parents came to pick them up. Carracosta came for Tricky, while Goomy awkwardly met his parents - a goodra and a gallade - outside, who fawned over him protectively. He didn't seem to enjoy it.

Since Espurr was back to having no guardians, she just stayed inside the school clinic, where Audino was tidying up. Audino was busy dusting things that barely needed dusting and making beds that were already made. Espurr recognised it as a nervous tic. It seemed like she was trying to keep herself occupied.

"It was Nuzleaf," she said when they were alone, breaking the silence between them.

"What?" said Audino in surprise.

"Nuzleaf tried to feed us to the Coneheads," explained Espurr. "We think he was keeping them in the school dungeon. He was responsible for all of it. He admitted to it all."

Audino didn't answer her for a moment. She just silently cleaned. Espurr couldn't blame her. From the swirl of colours she saw rattling over Audino's head, she could tell Audino was going through a lot.

"Tricky and Goomy will say the same thing," she added. "I wanted you to know."

Audino still didn't answer, but she did stop cleaning for a moment. Espurr thought she sniffled, before she wiped her eyes and ushered Espurr out.

"Go along now," she said. "Join your friends."

And that was the end of it.

Later on, Espurr caught hints of a conversation from behind closed doors.

"We're removing the statue from the dungeon," said Farfetch'd. "It looks like young Espurr was correct. We discovered… evidence that somemon had been living there for a while."

"Living in a mystery dungeon?" that was Simipour's sleepy voice.

"Not only that," said Farfetch'd, "but there were documents from the school in there too, concerning the adoptions. The kind only teachers would know about."

An uneasy silence followed.

"Well, it wasn't any of us," said a scratchy voice. That was Watchog.

"That it wasn't," Simipour agreed. "Any chances of a break-in?"

"I would have noticed a break-in," said Audino.

She paused, then took a breath to compose herself.

"I don't want to believe that about him," she said, her voice sorrowful. "He was always so nice. When I heard he was looking to teaching here, I was…"

She trailed off.

"I recommended him," she sighed.

"It's not your fault," Simipour said comfortingly. Espurr heard him patting her on the back. "How could you have known?"

A chair creaked. Audino must have taken a seat.

"But now… the question remains: what do we do with Espurr?"

Simipour's question was answered with silence, as everymon in the room thought. Espurr pressed her ear to the door, waiting to hear the decision…

"Well, we can decide later," said Simipour. "There are the after-school festivities to worry about, after all."

With a relieved pause, everymon got up from their seats. Espurr, who didn't wish to be caught eavesdropping, made herself scarce fast.


~\({O})/~

With the test complete, the inspection had finished also. Espurr supposed that with how Watchog's test had gone, and them being a teacher short, the marks weren't going to be very good. The atmosphere was gloomy as the staff and students packed up and left, a dour look on Krookodile's face. He always looked like that, so she decided not to read too much into it. But it didn't feel like a good outcome.

As night fell, a small festival was held in the village square. Kangaskhan was serving food she'd been baking all day, and there was a lot of talking. A small fire had been set in the middle of the square. The entire village had shown up. Espurr, Tricky, and Goomy each grabbed a plate of everything and sat down on one of the logs, talking to each other by the small fire in the middle. After the day they'd had, Espurr felt she could eat an entire building.

Soon after everymon had been fed, Krookodile leaned against a building and folded his arms. Just like before, Espurr couldn't read him. Soon after him came a very strange 'mon. He was an elderly grovyle, flanked by cameras and security-mon. Espurr learned he was the Prime Minister.

When he reached Espurr, he stopped and stared. It was like he saw right through her, but unlike with Nuzleaf, Espurr didn't feel malice.

"Nice to meet you, kids," he said with a smile. Espurr noticed the rest of the class had lined up as well.

He approached the head of the square, surrounded by lights and cameras.

"As your Prime Minister," he began. "It is my honour to represent all parts of this nation, including the small towns like Serenity Village that provide so much for us all. With this in mind, I am happy to report on behalf of Crossings that the school has passed its yearly inspection, in light of exemplary test results and teamwork in the face of complications."

There were cheers from around the square. Espurr, Tricky, and Goomy looked at each other excitedly.

"The school would also like to commemorate three students who were brave in the face of assured danger and worked as a team," continued Rufus. "One of the greatest lessons we can learn in our childhoods is the power of trust in others. To look beyond prejudice, arrogance, and hate, and work together as a team. Students Espurr, Fennekin Tricky, and Goomy have displayed these qualities in spades, and earned particular commendations on behalf of this school's inspector."

Espurr looked at Krookodile in shock. For just a moment, she thought she saw his face curl upwards in a smirk, but it was just for a second.

The festival went on for a couple more hours. Espurr, Tricky, and Goomy conversed and played some games with each other. But through the whole ordeal, Espurr could have sworn the green lizard with leafblades on his wrists never took his eyes off of her.

Sometime after the life of the festival had died down, Audino sat down next to Espurr.

"The school got saved," said Espurr brightly.

"Yes it did," said Audino. Espurr could tell she was masking pain with a smile. She took a deep breath.

"As you know, Nuzleaf was supposed to take you in, before…" she trailed off, then took a sharp breath, as if she was building up courage. "Well. Seeing as that won't be possible anymore, the school… I would like to offer to take you in."

She looked down at Espurr.

"How do you feel about that?"

Espurr smiled warmly.

"I'd love that," she said.


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The next day, Ampharos was released from jail. Everymon in the village seemed very hush-hush about it. Espurr, Tricky, and Goomy, who had explained themselves profusely to Officer Magnazone in the aftermath of yesterday's incident, assumed evidence about Nuzleaf from the school must have reached them.

Now that he was free, Tricky was adamant about meeting him at their agreed time.

"Think about it!" she said as they waited. "Don't you want to know who he is?"

Espurr nodded. "He was protecting us the entire time…"

The question was just… why? Why should Ampharos care about them at all? Did he know Nuzleaf somehow?

"Sure," she said. "Let's go."

"Alright!" Tricky whooped with glee, prancing up and shooting a flame into the sky.

Later on, Tricky pulled Espurr aside as they trotted towards Carracosta's house.

"I wanted you to have this!" she chirped, taking one of the blue scarfs off their neck and lassoing it on her nose. She held her head out to Espurr, urging her to take it.

Espurr refused. "You don't have to–"

"I want to!" insisted Tricky. "I haven't had anymon to share these with for… a while.

Espurr thought for a bit, then gently took it.

"I'll take good care of it," promised Espurr. She tied it around her neck carefully. It rested comfortably around her fur. Afterwards, she looked in a nearby puddle of water to see her reflection.

"It looks great on you!" said Tricky, joining Espurr and looking down. Espurr had to agree.

She had been waiting for a sign from Hydreigon. Any sign at all. Now that Nuzleaf was gone… All Espurr could do was wait for another dream.

It was hanging over her like a weight. Eventually, she was going to have to go home. She was still figuring out how to tell Tricky and Goomy when the time came. Not to think of Audino.

Truth be told, she was having her doubts about Hydreigon. The knowledge still sat with her, weighing heavy on her head - Nuzleaf had been a Human. Just like her. Only, instead of Hydreigon, he'd been taking orders from… something else. Espurr got the creeping feeling that all of this was much, much bigger than just the Coneheads.

Not to mention, Hydreigon was keeping secrets from her; she just knew it. Espurr just wasn't sure what he was lying about. Could he have been wrong about Ampharos? Wrong about Nuzleaf? Were there more humans and he just didn't know? Was he really as clueless as he claimed to be? Or was he…

Espurr gulped. She hoped he wasn't working with Nuzleaf. Or whatever Nuzleaf worked for.

When she really thought about it, Espurr wasn't so eager to leave anymore. She was starting to like it here. Nuzleaf was wrong, she decided. She didn't need power, or to go back where she came from, to feel like she had a place. She could make one right here.

Sunset was nearly over by the time Espurr, Tricky, and Goomy made their way up towards the hill with the large tree, where Ampharos had agreed to meet them. As promised, Ampharos was waiting under the tree's branches, a smallish box tucked under his arm. A westward breeze was blowing, causing him to fiddle with his swooshy green cloak.

"We… we made it…" Tricky panted out after she had caught her breath enough to talk.

"So I see," Ampharos responded. "And you brought Espurr and Goomy with you too – how splendid! Although I must admit… I have a bit of a confession to make."

"Confession?" Tricky glanced at Ampharos, tilting her head. "What kind?"

"See, I might have lied when I said there were multiple Expedition Society Memberships…" Ampharos quickly set the box down in front of them.

"Behold!" he declared, opening the box. "One Expedition Society Membership, because one is all you will ever need." Espurr and Tricky gazed inside the box, where a small, hexagonal device sat.

"With this, you can officially register an Expedition Society dungeon team," Ampharos continued. "You just insert the included blue orb, type in the name, save it, and you're good as a gastrodon!"

"Pardon, but, who are you?" Espurr asked, training her gaze on Ampharos. "And why are you giving us this?"

If there was a time for him to fess up, it'd be now.

"Why, dear Espurr…" Ampharos bowed. "You already know the answer to that. I am… the Dashing Wanderer!"

And with that, he threw his cape up flamboyantly, but the wind kicked it up over his face.

"Ah… never mind that," he muttered, muffled as he messed with the garment. He adjusted it into a more comfortable position, batting it down so the wind wouldn't blow it up again. "As of today, you two children can be proud to call yourself Junior Expedition Society Members!"

Tricky was over the moon at the idea of having anything to do with the Expedition Society, and there was nothing Espurr or Goomy could do to calm her down. She pranced around the tree until the sun began to sink a little low into the sky, and even Ampharos had to leave for the night. Soon after, she calmed down, sitting next to Espurr and watching the sun finish sinking.

Espurr looked down at the box, which had been sitting next to her for a while. She pushed it back over to Tricky.

"It's all yours," she said. "I know you wanted it."

Tricky looked down at the box uncomfortably, like she wanted to say something she'd been stewing on for a while. "Um, I wanted to ask…"

She pushed the expedition gadget back, until the box sat an equal distance between her, Espurr, and Goomy. "Do you two want to make an exploration team with me? We'd do things prepared, and…. and only if you want to. You just have to tell me now. I-It's fine if you don't want to."

Her head turned down towards the grass in front of them immediately.

"I just don't wanna do it alone," Tricky quickly admitted, breaking Espurr's train of thought. It was little more than a mutter, nearly silent as she studied the grass beneath her. "I wanna be with a friend or two."

Espurr clutched the straps of her ratty old exploration bag. She thought about it a bit before answering. After all those dungeons in the past few days… she was starting to learn the ropes of it all - perhaps even have a little fun. How bad could it be, really?

"Sure," she said brightly. "I'd love to."

"Really?" Tricky's face lit up brighter than the sun. She looked at Goomy. "What about you?"

Goomy, who had looked uncertain, nodded lively.

"Y-yeah," he said. "I-it'll be fun."

Espurr nodded too, for finality. Before she knew it, Tricky had them both wrapped up in a nuzzling embrace.

"Thankyousomuch!" Tricky exclaimed, wrapping them both tightly in her forearms. "I promise on the tip of my tail, we're going to have the best summer ever!"

They watched the sun slowly setting over the easterly mountains. For right now, there was just the blowing of the wind, the setting sun over the lake, and a quiet peace Espurr hadn't felt before. No matter how terrible Pancham was, how scary the dungeons got, or wherever the Coneheads were lurking, at least she didn't have to face them alone anymore. There were pokemon who could have her back through everything, and that was enough.

Enough to make this new, unfamiliar place feel just a little more like home.

When the sun finished setting and they headed back towards the village, Espurr headed down the forest path towards the school clinic feeling warm, fuzzy, and excited for the day ahead.

Maybe, just maybe, this could be her home. A real home.


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???

Nuzleaf coughed and hacked, his eyes flying open in an instant. There was dust in his mouth. And dust on his arms, torso, and cloak…

He rolled over, heaving onto the sandy ground under him. When he was done, his body calmed down, he pulled himself to his hands and knees in the strange, barren sand. Then he realized something that struck fear into him: the sky was red.

Nuzleaf was on his feet in a second, stumbling back. Was this where the 'mon his beheeyem killed were sent? Everything around him was silent, barren, coated in a faint, sickly red gleam like the sky was withering. Trees were gnarled, leafless ghosts of themselves, and the wind was scented with a faint rotting smell. Red dust blew in on the breeze.

You failed me.

Nuzleaf spun around. Behind him stood… himself.

A carbon copy, cloak and all. But when it moved, its movements looked off, rapid and artificial, like the jerking of a puppet-master's string.

He realized immediately. A fear like nothing else overtook him, gnawing at the edges of his vision, driving him a step away from madness.

"I— I didn't—" he stuttered, falling to his knees, trembling and silently pleading for mercy. "I just— I thought— She might be useful—"

He scrambled back as the other him walked closer, its steps slow and zombie-like, but measured and consistent. His back pressed up against something. It was a large tree. Could he move around it?

But the creature would pounce if he did. Fear, and the twisted echoes of a former trust, kept him planted right where he was.

"No, please—" he pleaded, his voice a whimper as the other him stepped into place only inches away. "Please—"

Its eyes were dead. They were like a void.

I do not offer second chances.

The face split apart, brown, knobbly skin giving way to something underneath, jet black and filled with spines…

Kill.

Nuzleaf's last second alive was filled with abject terror. Then the creature, claws, teeth, and all, pounced.


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The end of Book I.

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Music of the Week!

Gryffindor Wins the House Cup – John Williams
 
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tomatorade

The great speckled bird
Location
A town at the bottom of the ocean
Pronouns
He/Him
Partners
  1. quilava
  2. buizel
Here for blitz/catnip. Serif fonts are based.

I do remember reading part of one of these a while back, though I don't know if it was the OG or rewrite so this will be a refresher for me. Read the prologue and first two chapters.

Prologue

Well, I don't remember the prologue so perhaps it wasn't the rewrite I read before.

We also get right into original fantasy lmao. this is one of those prologues where you could remove the pokemon names and it would simply become a high fantasy isekai novel.

I think I like this as a prologue. I have more mixed feelings on it than I thought at first read.

While I was initially going to complain that is so far removed from what I know the majority of the first section of the fic is about that I worried it would likely get lost along the way, but I do think it wraps around by the time the talk of humans comes about. I also think, knowing what I know about the later sections of the old fic, it's good to sprinkle bits of that earlier on. That was one of my issues reading the original and in general with PMD rewrite fics--they both want to be faithful to the original opening but also eventually go so far off the rails that they lose all resemblance and those two things tend to conflict.

Besides that, the writing is great. I admire how quickly you can establish a sense of world. You've got a great sense for description and it's surprising that I manage to have a solid image of this scene and an inkling of world in what is a pretty short prologue. Also, short prologue. I love short prologues. Not on principle, but this was the perfect length for what amounts to a conversation between mew and grovyle and you still managed to sneak extra worldbuilding in there.

Onto some concerns. While I like that you include some of the later stuff here, I still worry that it won't be enough lol. This obviously depends on how you write the next however many chapters, but the PSMD opening is looooong and I remember that being no different in the first version of the fic. At the same time, I like there being a balance between that PMD opening feeling of confusion and finding your place in the world. One thing the games, and by extension the fics, do well enough is slowly integrating the MC into this fantasy world and work them up into functioning members of society/chosen one hero figures. So I hope you manage to keep that in this version.

Chapter 1

The start of this reminds me of some classic kids lit. Like Roald Dahl or something, though I can't picture his style in my head. It's something about the way you emulate a childlike thought process while still writing like an adult. It's got a specific feel that I like, especially in lines like 'sixty-three percent ordinary'. Just a very interesting construction of words. And followed by some fun, slightly exaggerated memories of her world. It brings some fun flavour to the start of the fic and does a lot to characterise espurr. The OG PSMD opening was not very good at that. The whole looking into the water and being shocked at your appearance needs a little extra spice to be interesting these days, so this works.

That being said, there is still a bit of that. Blame that on me reading every PMD fanfic when I was in high school but I'm very tired of the PMD waking up opening. Though there's not much you can do about my preferences. I do think there was potential to add some of the personality from espurr's little opening here, though. Depending on how you portray her (can't fully remember that) she might react more calmly or analytically to her situation. Or not, I dunno. I just feel like I was impressed by your first couple paragraphs but now I need to take my medecine lol.

And that's ultimately my main complaint for this bit.

It is very well written. I said you've got a knack for description and that's evident here, I especially like teh description of the beeheyem being weird flesh aliens. Certainly more intimidating than some random dudes blinking at you in the forest.

I should also say I like your style. It's always fun to see a writer put in the effort to make chapter headings and art and etc. Love the font lol. But it extends to the writing as well. As a whole, the fic feels very carefully written and considered. I like the little spleshes of onomatopia, I like that you don't abuse italics. The pacing of the action is snappy without skimping no description. Overall, just fun to read.

Suddenly this becomes a survival horror story. Probably a good idea considering how goofy the PSMD opening is. There's a palpable sense of fear nand it is certainly a twist on the formula lol.

Some of the problems I'm having are because this is a retelling, admittedly. I find myself a little impatient because, to some extend, I know how this will go so it's like I'm reading a story for the second time in some moments. This should dissapate a little as we get into the meat of the story, but the beginning suffers particularly hard from this. It's also quite long. The minute-to-minute is very well paced, but as a whole this could maybe be condensed. The first and second chase, maybe, since they accomplish the same things.

Thankfullly it doesn't tak that long to get into the meat of the changes. I guess I skipped the human being espurr this time, but that could technically just be a fun oc. I've never been on the nuzlocke daddy train and am thankful we get to spend the time with a more responsible adult like audino.

More strong character building here. Things like sudino thinking about how stingy kecleon is give a sense she's a character with history and a place in this world beyond an NPC. Plus being introduced to her by her job/hobby/passion is cool.

One of my favourite parts of PMD fic is all the ways people interepret the setting. In this case, you've got dungeons with apparitions. One problem I spot immediatly is that apparition is a pretty uncommon word and you use it a distracting amount back to back. Other than that, this is the only hint I've perceived so far. It's implied to fog is not natural to this dungeon, at least so I will have to wait for more dungeon lore.

Chapter 2

Felt a little rude to leave it off on me complaining about reading PMD so I carried on lol.

We open with what I'm assuming is pre-espurr espurr's diary. This is great. I worried the prologue's vibe and such wouldn't carry on into the beginning of the fic and would jumpscare me later, but little format breaks like this do a really good job implying a larger story than small town school escapades. I also like that it still includes espurr's human life in the fic in some way. I tend to like fics that do that rather than just ignore the human stuff. Beyond that, there's not much going on in this instance. It could umply the moments before she was isekai'd but who knows. For now, it's a young child pondering life and such.

I get more of a sense that espurr's a child here than in the game lol. I never remember if you were supposed to be a child then or just treated like one, but that always bothered me. I have no opinion either way, but I do want to know what I'm supposed to think of the protag so It's nice to have answers right away. She's also a believable child. It's difficult to explain why, in this case, but she feels both more vulnerable and more open than an adult would be in this situation.

And finally we get Tricky. And Tricky is being Tricky. On one hand, she has easily the most personality of maybe any PMD character. On the other, I found her kind of grating lol. Hopefully a fic will give her more space and more development.

Quick nitpick, when Tricky is pestering espurr, you have a lot of single dialogue lines back-to-back. I get you're trying to have her steamroll espurr in the conversation, but this reads really awkward to me. Even after I realised that it was just Tricky with no espurr responses, the paragraphing interferes with the sense that these questions all come quickly after each other. There's too much of a pause between each questions and a run-on sentence might work better for this.

In any case, Tricky has more chemistry with espurr than a silent protag and she's already more tolerable with someone to bounce off of. Espurr also seems like a great pairing. The loud-quiet dynamic is a classic, and I have no complaints yet.

Another thing I wil say about Tricky is that she's proactive which is great for things happening in the fic. I doubt Espurr would've left the clinic on her own and Tricky really speeds throught the tour and gets distracted immediately. She knows where the plot is, for sure.

As we continue on, it's great that Espurr is a little assertive. having them be foil to each other is another classic that never gets old and Tricky really, really needs the pushback. Especially if what I remember about the game plot is accurate. There are some moments later I'm excited for with these two version of the characters involved.

Anyway, we continue on the setup so unfortunately I don't have much to say about the plotting yet. You've got a broad range of emotions to keep things interesting, though. Which also makes me feel very sorry for Espurr lol.

I think this was better than what I remember the OG version of this fic being? Certainly better than the game, but it's hard to tell when it's been so long sice I first read this. I do think the inclusions--the prologue and such are great ideas. Other than that, the writing is consistently great. The characters and descriptions are strong so far and they absolutely carry the fic for the moment. LIke I said, I'm not a huge fan of PMD openings so it's high praise to say that reading through this was a breeze despite my complaining.
 

Ambyssin

Gotta go back. Back to the past.
Location
Residency hell
Pronouns
he/him
Partners
  1. silvally-dragon
  2. necrozma-ultra
  3. milotic
  4. zoroark-soda
  5. dreepy
  6. mewtwo-ambyssin
  7. vulpix-ambyssin
They were the only team without a flag, after all.
It's now occurring to me that the previous chapter is basically your take on Harry grabbing the Portkey Triwizard Cup and getting yeeted to the site of Voldemort's revival. I should've put two and two together from the get go.
I haven't taken a bath in six months and no-mon's complained!
So, uh, when's the chapter depicting Tricky spreading flees to Espurr? We know it's coming. Don't you lie to me and say it won't happen.
You just might be the single luckiest kids I have ever seen in my entire career
You might say they have big protagonist energy! :V
a goodra and a gallade
What is it with fics that Namo is related to in some capacity having cursed species couples?
"It is my honour to represent all parts of this nation, including the small towns like Serenity Village that provide so much for us all
Because, as we all know, small towns are the backbone of the Water Continent. :unquag:
To look beyond prejudice, arrogance, and hate, and work together as a team.
Oh my god he really is turning their near-death experience into political points. Stump speech and all. :unquag:
I would like to offer to take you in
So in the end, she really does get to end up with Audino after all.
I am… the Dashing Wanderer!
Once. Just once. I'm telling you that he should introduce himself like this... and then some leaves silently blow by or a tumbleweed rolls past. Or some kricketune chirp in the distance.
"Y-yeah," he said. "I-it'll be fun."
Narrator: It will not be fun.

WELP. Nuzleaf got shanked by Dark Matter. Which, uh, almost certainly puts this fic into straights that can veer wildly off course. Or maybe not that wildly. I suppose Yveltal could just swoop in and send the kids to the Voidlands at some point. And then things will proceed however they will from there. It makes for a decent "introduction" of sorts to Dark Matter. Not officially named yet, but let's face it. This is a Super fic. Everyone will know at this point.

Anyway, congratulations on reaching the end of your first book! I'm not sure where in the grand scheme of things that puts you. And I feel like trying to speculate on that will just leave you 🫠 from thinking about how much is left of the fic. It sounds like book 2 will take us into summer, so I imagine there'll be some Serenity Village official Junior Expeditioning™ to start things off before the kids leave for bigger and better places. With, uh, the books that follow presumably having the A plot firmly in the driver's seat once they get acclimated to Expedition Society life.

Aside from Goomy's presence changing the dynamics, I am... curious if you intend to follow up on Pancham and Shelmet at all. It sounds like their parents have connections and it seems like you are keen on exploring the politicking of your PMD AU where the government functions like the UK. So, I would hope that their, uhh, privileges get poked at a bit. Heck, you could even double down and have them end up on Dark Matter's side when their upper crust parents try to save their own hides by working for it. Or something.

As per usual, I'm giving my own music suggestion. The bulk of the chapter focuses on the heroes recovery, but I do think World of Drawcia is a delightfully unsettling track for the introduction of the Voidlands. :)
 
Special Episode I - The End's Beginning New

SparklingEspeon

Back on Her Bullshit
Staff
Location
a Terrace of Indeterminate Location in Snowbelle
Pronouns
She/Her
Partners
  1. espurr
  2. fennekin
  3. zoroark
hsets://con.gov.nebyllin/geography/provinces/luftand/8682362

Province Information: Luftand

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Luftand is a maritime island province of Nebyllin, lying halfway between the North and the South. Once the seat of the Rescue Federation, Luftand Major, the primary landmass, serves today as a major shipping, tourism, and military hotspot. The capital of Luftand is Baram Town, a major port city with access to the island’s waterways. Shipping and military funding form Luftand’s largest industries, comprising upwards of 50% of its yearly output.

Southern Luftand contains the majority of the island’s population, military bases, and tourist attractions. Northern Luftand comprises vast swathes of rugged mountains, wilderness, and mystery dungeons, with most routes serving as trails or shipping pathways. Pokemon Plaza is the largest city in Northern Luftand and home to the Rescuer’s Guild, one of the world’s first major exploration establishments.


It is advised to bring partners and a guide when travelling through Northern Luftand, as a high number of disappearances within the region have been recorded over the past few weeks.

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SPECIAL EPISODE I: THE END'S BEGINNING

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. . .. . . "I never understood how you manage to sleep on Lapras' backs," Archen said groggily, ruffling his feathers in exhaustion as he stepped onto the dock after Mawile. "Don't you ever worry about falling off?"

The many painted windmills of Baram Town stood proudly above them, painted vanes lazily turning in the early morning breeze. On any normal day, seeing the windmills would have been a breathtaking sight worth the six-hour journey. Today was not a normal day, and despite his long, sleepless night, they wouldn't be staying in town for more than an hour. Long nights and early mornings made Archen a very cranky bird.

Mawile, whose time management he sorely referred to as 'Drop-Dead Organization', wanted to be at their destination before it got dark, which apparently meant chartering a lapras in the dead of night and setting out only moments after. They'd just arrived in Baram Town at the crack of dawn, and Lapras promised to return for them in a few days.

This mission was very important, Archen heard. A few days ago, there was a cutoff in communications up north, and the Expedition Society pounced on the opportunity to investigate. Archen wasn't sure why investigations were going so slow, especially considering how major the shipping disruptions would be.

Mawile marked off the second box on a page in her travel journal, which Archen saw was marked 'Arrive in Baram Town' (the first was 'Charter Lapras').

"Trial and error," she replied, stowing the journal away in her exploration bag. "You learn quickly where the best spots to sleep on a lapras' back are once you've tried it a couple of times."

Archen shivered at the thought. He never cared much for water in the first place, let alone doing something as foolhardy as that. If only he could fly… This mission would be over already, he ruminated.

The paved, crooked streets of Baram were still mostly empty, belonging to the early birds, miscellaneous other early 'mon, and pairs of unfortunate explorers such as themselves. Even Kecleon was still hurriedly setting up shop as Mawile and Archen walked over to his stall.

"Ah – just a minute!" he called out with a sense of manufactured cheer and a wide grin, hurriedly straightening things on shelves. "I'll be ready for you in just a minute~! Bit of a late day today…"

Archen had a bit of a hard time fathoming how anymon could consider this late. Mawile swiftly handed him their exploration bag for the items, which Archen disgruntledly took in his wings.

"Welcome to the Kecleon Shop!" Kecleon chirped, straightening his apron discreetly. "What would you like to purchase?"

"Everything on this list, please." Mawile handed him a sizable list. "I assume you're fully stocked?"

Kecleon suddenly looked far more distressed than what was good for business.

"Actually…" he began, wringing his spindly lizard claws together uncomfortably, "My shipments come from the Rescuer's Guild in Pokemon Plaza. I haven't had a delivery in over two weeks, I'm afraid…"

The wringing of his claws intensified. A stress tic. Archen was good at reading those.

Mawile took a minute to study the list.

"I think we can make a few exceptions," she conceded, pulling an inked quill out of the bag Archen was holding and deftly crossing several things off. Kecleon's face relaxed considerably at the large number of crossed-out items. "We happen to be on our way to Pokemon Plaza ourselves," she said.

"R-really?" Kecleon's face lit up as he removed items from the shelves. "What for?"

"HAPPI business," Archen grumpily chimed in. "We're investigating a lack of communications and some strange reports in the area."

"Perhaps you'll take a look-see for the lucario who delivers my stocks every week?" Kecleon asked hopefully, setting the last of the items on the counter. "I'll throw in a future discount…" he hurriedly added afterwards.

"We'll keep an eye out." Mawile's reply was short and prompt. "The bill, please?"

"Oh – yes – I'm forgetting things left and right lately—"

Kecleon dived under the counter, emerging with a quill and paper. He tallied the prices of all the ingredients up so fast Archen was surprised they hadn't established a shopkeeper's monopoly yet, until his tired mind reminded him that they had. Kecleon wrote the final bill at the bottom of the paper and slid it to Mawile.

"That'll be 5500 Poke," he finished cheerfully. "Except for the tiny reviver seeds. I'm afraid I'm plumb out of those."

Mawile dug for the money, handing it to Kecleon and placing the items in the bag. Archen slung it over his back as they left the stall.

"Here." Mawile took the bag from Archen and handed him a chesto berry as they walked through Baram Plaza. "Breakfast."

Archen took it, watching Mawile pull out a chesto berry of her own and take a large bite of it. It seemed she was more tired than she let on. All those nights of sleepless rune research must be taking their toll after all.

"I thought you were going to stop taking those," said Archen, eyeing the berry.

"It'll take us approximately seven hours to arrive at Pokemon Plaza," said Mawile, taking another bite of the bitter berry. "We both need to be at our best for this."

"We could rest," Archen suggested grumpily. "Chesto berries can't keep you awake forever," he added.

"Stopping here will remove several hours from our timetable," Mawile replied, ignoring his statement. "Time is important on a job like this. We can rest all we need when we get back."

She downed the rest of it like it was a rare delicacy. Archen grimaced through his beak at the sight.

"I napped on the lapras," Mawile added a bit later. Archen shrugged, trudging after her as they walked towards the main route out of Baram and further into Luftand.

No matter how he prepared for it, this was going to be a long journey.


~\({O})/~

For a place referred to as a vacation destination, there was a surprising amount of forest and underbrush. Archen stopped as Mawile's back maw chomped down on an invasive branch, ripped it off the tree, and chucked it to the side. This happened often. Archen had already lost count.

"How close are we?" he asked, ducking under another low-hanging branch. They'd been walking for hours now, and despite being fit, Archen was starting to tucker out.

Mawile stopped and looked up from the map she was reading.

"Very worrying," she spoke.

"What's worrying?" Archen asked.

"If I'm reading this map correctly," Mawile calmly began, letting her back maw latch onto another branch and rip it off, "Then we should be getting close to Pokemon Plaza. However, the underbrush remains just as untamed as it's been this whole trip."

"And?" asked Archen, stepping around the splintered branch stem to glance at the map.

"Pokemon Plaza is a frequented area," Mawile clarified. "Therefore, the path should be maintained, unlike the anomaly we see here." She gestured briefly to the overgrown flora around her.

Archen started to realize.

"You think the reports are true?" he asked as they crawled onwards.

"We have yet to confirm the statues," said Mawile. "However, deserted seems to be accurate."

Drawing her expedition gadget – a slim, yellow, hexagonal device with a connection orb in the middle – Mawile held it up and snapped several pictures of their surroundings. Archen was beginning to really notice how much of the path was thorny and overgrown for the first time.

Just ten feet down the path, a tarped wagon sat on its side. The most putrid of smells wafted from under the tarp, making Archen queasy.

"Over there," he said, pointing it out.

Hitched to the wagon sat a perfect stone statue of a lucario, staring up at the sky in horror at something that was no longer there.

Mawile and Archen approached the wagon quickly.

"Well, that confirms the statues," said Archen, swallowing his nausea. Mawile furrowed her brow, deep in thought. They both stepped forward to inspect it.

The details on the lucario statue were near life-like. Its paws were on the harness that attached it to the cart, curled around straps that hadn't been undone on time. If it hadn't sat before them, Archen wouldn't have believed such intricate sculpting was possible…

…Unless it wasn't. Archen recalled Kecleon's words of worry: "My shipments come from the Rescuer's Guild in Pokemon Plaza. I haven't had a delivery in over two weeks, I'm afraid…" Was it such a stretch to believe… ?

Ignoring Archen's incessant feather-ruffling, Mawile strode over to the tarped wagon, holding her breath when the smell became too strong to bear. She whipped off the tarp with her maw, spinning full circle and casting the tarp away to see what the wagon held.

" I knew it…" Mawile muttered, taking out her journal and recording the finding as Archen gagged in the distance. Snap. More photos were taken with the expedition gadget.

Setting the journal aside, Mawile leaned in towards the mishmash of rotting berries and other ingredients, picking up an oran by the stem in her paw. It had molded over and bruised in several places, and felt like a miniature sack of water. Stamped on the boxes was the insignia of the Kecleon Foundation, addressed to a stall in Baram Town.

"A few weeks old, by the looks of it," she said to Archen. "This must have been Kecleon's shipment. And if this is the delivery…"

They both stared back at the statue that sat in front of the cart as the full implications of that deduction hit them.

Mawile inspected the statue carefully, noticing further all the life-like details the statue had to it. Far too many for it to be a statue.

"He was attacked from behind," Mawile stated, stepping back and snapping photos.

"If that is… him," said Archen shakily. It was hard to believe something like that was true. But the statue, the coincidence… there was too much about it to ignore.

They pressed forward. Mawile' deductions held true as they went. The underbrush only seemed to get worse the further in they tread, and eventually they happened upon the statue of a scyther wildly slashing at something from the underbrush.

"The hedgekeeper, I assume." Mawile took pictures of that too. Archen fearfully glanced at the statue as they went.

They could see the short buildings of Pokemon Plaza through the trees as they walked. The area around them was eerily quiet. Soon after, Mawile and Archen entered the main square of the small town, which was filled with the statues of countless pokemon running in terror. From the looks on their stone faces, whatever had happened here had taken them all by surprise.

"Okay…" Archen nervously ruffled his feathers. "We've seen everything we needed to. Let's go back now. We'll declare the place off-limits, done."

"We need proof first," Mawile told him, pulling both their expedition gadgets from her bag and handing one to Archen. "I'll need a little help photographing everything. Starting…"

Mawile and Archen photographed the various statues from opposite sides of the square, working in tandem until they had amassed a decent reconstruction of the scene. Looking through the evidence, neither Mawile nor Archen noticed the dark, spiny figure slinking along the rooftop…

Until it accidentally kicked a roof tile to the ground. Mawile spun around just in time to see it conjure what seemed like a shadow ball with its claws, aiming at Archen.

"Look out—"

Mawile dropped her expedition gadget, pulling Archen out of the way before the attack could land. It exploded against the wall of a house, turning the doorway to stone.

Both Mawile and Archen assumed a battle stance, looking straight at the blurred figure that stood on the roof. It was muscular, quadrupedal, and pitch-black. A bouquet of spines extended out of its back. It had no eyes. It looked like somemon had cut a hole in the fabric of reality.

"Expedition Society!" Archen shouted, showing the figure his badge. "Stand down and follow us!"

It was a vain gesture. He barely flapped out of the way of another shadow attack. The figure bounded off the roof and loped straight towards them. Mawile and Archen dove out of the way just in time, The figure crashed into a storefront in the square and brought the building collapsing down on it with a crash.

Dust settled, and Mawile and Archen picked themselves up.

"W-w-w-what was that?" Archen asked, his voice picking up into a squawk.

"Be on your guard," Mawile said, her eyes fixed as the rubble of the storefront began to shift. "It's coming back."

The rubble exploded outwards—

A hasty blue Protect barrier from Archen was enough to shield them both from the debris. The rubble flew to the side, leaving them untouched.

The charging figure that emerged from the wreckage a split second later tried to snap them up in its claws as it went, but Mawile pulled herself and Archen down low. The monster skidded over them, ramping up against the houses on the other end and charging back at them.

Mawile was swift. As Archen charged a Dragon Breath in retaliation, she pulled a blast seed from her exploration bag, and hurled it at the creature in time with Archen's attack—

The purple-colored explosion created by both the blast seed and the Dragon Breath would have brought the world's strongest pokemon to the brink of fainting. Both Mawile and Archen had to quickly scramble back to avoid being damaged by the resulting explosion as well. But when the explosion cleared, the shadowy figure was still standing all the same. Mawile almost lost her bearings in shock. What creature was it, to survive a blast as powerful as that?

The shadowy creature took a shaky step towards them, then another. It was limping.

It began to conjure a third attack. Mawile prepared to lure its aim elsewhere and dodge at the last second. Archen, panting hoarsely, prepared to get in a parrying blow and dive out of the way. But then, out of the blue, the figure stopped. Its body seemed to lock up just like one of Jirachi's malfunctioning robots. Mawile and Archen watched as it began to convulse violently, and then suddenly burst into tiny scraps of ash that floated off into the sky. There was nothing inside its body but more inky-black darkness.

Archen caught his breath heavily, picking up his fallen gadget from the ground.

"What was that?!" he asked hoarsely, trying to keep the fear out of his voice.

"I… don't know," said Mawile. "In all my years of dungeoneering and research I've never seen something like this."

Archen could tell she was just as shaken as he was. She gathered her bag and silently retrieved her and Archen's gadgets, stuffing them in. Then they picked themselves up and turned around.

Unbeknownst to the two explorers, a single flake of blackness blew off in the wind towards Baram Town.

Finished gathering their supplies, Mawile and Archen began the return trip to Baram Town. It would prove to be one of their most sombre trips to date.


~\({O})/~

"It's windy up here…" Archen stammered, ruffling his feathers as he and Mawile crossed yet another fenceless, sky-high bridge between the massive windmills of Baram Town.

"You're in better shape today," Mawile noted, tucking her clipboard back into her bag. The ground underneath them was elaborately paved, white stone.

"Yeah…" Archen ruffled his feathers nervously as they walked. "Well, sleep does wonders for a poor bird, it turns out."

Mawile, who had only slept a little and had eaten another chesto berry to compensate, tried not to show how much her eyes were drooping.

Archen looked upwards, met only with the sun and the looming presence of the windmills' massive, creaking vanes. They were on the highest bridge in the city, leading to the highest floor of the tallest building, a windmill so immense that scaling it could only have been practical for those with wings. The thought of how high up they were made Archen stray closer to the middle of the bridge.

Flying types were flying types, but somemon ought to have installed fences for those who weren't blessed with the power of flight.

A pair of murkrow fluttered forwards as Mawile and Archen approached the large doors at the end of the bridge.

"Names, appointments," one of them droned out, reciting from a tired script.

"Mawile and Archen, Expedition Society," Mawile responded without skipping a beat. "Here to see Mayor Honchkrow. Appointments scheduled for 9:00 A.M. on Wednesday."

The murkrow checked his clipboard, routinely confirming Mawile's information, then stepped aside.

"The mayor will be with you now," he said. "Right through those doors, please."

Mawile quickly took the lead, throwing open the doors gently and walking in.

The large, wooden double doors closed behind the pair of explorers, and then they were in the office of Mayor Honchkrow.

It was nearly impossible to tell where the gut ended and the feathers began. The immense bird could barely fit behind his desk, and Archen was even more skeptical about his ability to fly. There were a pair of perches in the office in place of chairs, meaning non-bird visitors would have to stand.

Mayor Honchkrow cleared his throat, leaning forward.

"And you are?" he warbled.

"Explorers Mawile and Archen of the Expedition Society," Mawile answered cleanly for them. "We're here to report on the sudden cut-off in communications from Pokemon Plaza."

Mayor Honchkrow didn't seem impressed. He hmmed, then rested his wings on his desk.

"Well, let's get down to business then. What I'm interested to hear is, why were two cartographers sent to scope out this mission?"

Both Mawile and Archen were baffled by the mayor's sudden deflection. Archen knew why they had been sent, of course: there hadn't been any serious investigation into the matter for almost a week now, even approaching informal suspicions that investigations were being blocked. He was beginning to see why.

"Now, now, nothing wrong with maps," Honchkrow corrected himself. "I love a good map. They make great napkins. But when mere map-making suddenly becomes interference on the level of a proper rescue guild, one has to assume…"

He let the sentence die in his breast. What he implied spoke louder.

"You'll find our credentials are steady," spoke Mawile. "We're a HAPPI-registered guild performing this investigation on behalf of Cloud Nine. You may contact the office there if you have any concerns."

"Don't let it go to your head." Honchkrow regained his composure, his belly rippling as he adjusted himself in his seat. "Or… heads. Which one is it again?"

Once again, Archen could see Mawile doing her best to take the mayor's comments in stride.

"Head, thank you."

Mawile removed the expedition gadgets from their bag, pressed the photo button, and let the mayor begin to slowly scroll through the photos of the deserted Pokemon Plaza. Honchkrow began to fidget uneasily as he viewed the slideshow of perfect stone statues, taking a deep breath once it was over.

"Something else you might want to know," Archen began before Honchkrow could say anything. "We were attacked right after we took those photos."

"Is this true?" Honchkrow asked, one eyebrow raised.

"It is." Mawile scrolled back through the photos. "We were ambushed by what appeared to be a walking anomaly, for lack of a better term. You can see the very edge of it in a few of these photos." She stopped on the photos for good measure, allowing Honchkrow to find the anomaly himself.

Honchkrow leaned back in his seat, taking a deep breath and rubbing his temples with his wings.

"I want those photos transferred to me," he said. "Leave the thingamabobs here. I'll deal with Cloud Nine. And then… I want the 'Explanation Society' – or whatever you call yourselves – to stay out of this. I don't need map makers meddling around in proper rescue guild business."

"With all due respect, Mayor," Mawile said evenly, "the Expedition Society is a registered guild under HAPPI. The mayoral office of Baram Town isn't."

"Is that so?" Honchkrow let out a chuckle that grated Archen's ears. "Care to explain why you're in my office reporting to me, then? Explain it away, throw all the jargon at me you want. Believe me, I'd love to hear it."

Mawile opted to stay silent. Instead, she stuffed the expedition gadgets in her bag and zipped it up, gesturing for Archen to follow her out.

"Thought so," Honchkrow puffed in satisfaction as they turned for the door. "As long as the Rescuer's Guild is out of the picture, every team on this island might as well report to me. And I want you both off. I don't want to see any of your faces back here again until this all blows over. Stay in your bounds. Be a good manager and go tell your employees that for me. And leave those thingamabobs at the door!"

They could almost see the smug smirk on his beak as the doors closed.


~\({O})/~

"Once we get back to the Society, I am taking a long, long nap," Archen announced as he and Mawile quickly strolled through the streets of Baram Town, putting as much distance between themselves and the large windmill as possible.

"That makes two of us," said Mawile. She checked her bag before carefully sealing it again. At the last minute, they had sneakily turned in a pair of blank connection orbs, switched out with the ones that contained the photos. The sooner they got out of town, the better.

The lapras they had chartered was running late, however, and the next wailord liner back to Lively Town wasn't for another six hours. That left them with little left to do except lay low until their lapras arrived. In hindsight, Archen couldn't really complain. Baram Town was a tourist location for a reason, after all.

"Count your lucky wooloo, that's all we'll hear about it officially." Mawile held on tightly to the exploration bag as they passed through what looked like a disassembled bird pokemons' choir. "We'll be out of HAPPI's snouts once we hand over those photos to Cloud Nine."

"I wonder what caused the delay?" Archen wondered aloud as they passed a stall of dungeon supplies. "I take this lapras all the time, he's almost never late."

"I wonder if something occurred at the harbor," wondered Mawile, spotting a strange crowd gathering near the docks. "Harbor traffic often interferes with lapras trave—"

A sudden commotion erupted from the crowd, cutting her off. Without another word between them, the two explorers rushed in the direction of the harbor, pushing past several other 'mon who were gawking in horror.

A panicking slurpuff pointed a trembling limb towards the water as they and a few other pokemon arrived to see the source of the confusion.

"Look…" she gasped out.

The source of all the commotion made both Archen and Mawile's hearts skip a beat. Floating on the water was the stone statue of a lapras on a wooden raft, a note stuck to their chest in thick, loopy handwriting:


Drop The Trail

Or You're Next

This Is Your Only Warning

Mawile acted quickly. She pulled out an expedition gadget – it didn't matter which one – and snapped a photo of the statue floating before them. Then two others. Then a close-up of the note, and another, just to be safe. Then she quickly pulled Archen away by the wing, the bird scrambling to keep up as she walked away from the docks at a brisk pace.

"W-what's this about?" Archen squawked, trying not to end up with his poor feathers pulled out.

"This is better discussed at the inn," Mawile said, but even her steady tone couldn't help but betray the slightest hint of unease. "We don't want to be tangling with this when the local rescue teams show up. It'll create complications."

"I know this may be a bad time," Kecleon asked hopefully as the pair of explorers rushed by his stall. "But have you heard any word on when my supplier will—"

"Don't count on it," Mawile told him flatly. And then they were gone.


~\({O})/~

Music of the Week!

Reason - Yoshihiro Ike
 
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StolenMadWolf

Loony Moony
Pronouns
She/They
Welp, time to come on round once again for a Review Blitz review with two chapters! I’m going to focus on Chapters 4 and 5. My usual disclaimers with these kind of reviews apply as per usual. So let us begin.

So, Chapter 4 is a slow and steady affair, but starts off with a nice beginning. Namely the (in)famous spirit advisor scenes, namely with the Voice of Life from Gates to Infinity coming through the door here. I haven’t played Gates to Infinity at any point, or even followed a walkthrough of the game, but I do have an idea on who the guy is, and I will admit I’m kinda surprised with the way he is portrayed here with the more casual dialog. But hey, at least he’s doing a big favour and trying to let Espurr know what exactly is going on in the world right? Or at least, what she may well be expected to do… cue the funny reaction from Espurr straight up asking to go home. And of course, this doesn’t work, and so she has to agree to help. Good to get some idea of the wider stakes and plans. Meanwhile, the rest of the chapter is a bit more light hearted, with Watchdog being just as bashable as in canon, Tricky still running on hyperactive energy and Gloomy… actually getting on kinda well with Espurr, even if she is just going through the motions. Still offers a good bit of character bonding and the like.

Oh, and we also have an elderly raichu blasted into… something. Very cryptic and very concerning there.

Chapter 5 actually starts off with a bit of an exposition dump, namely explaining the region that Serenity Village is positioned within and what exists there. It’s a pretty damn nice detail that really does help expand the lore. Sure, it’s upfront, but it doesn’t reveal too much information so it still leaves us with some more to discover, whilst also being able to provide plenty of context!

Compared to the previous chapter, this is more of a slow burning one. We do get the hints of some trouble at the school being inspected, which weirdly leads me to understanding exactly how Ardino feels with that. It’s a mundane but very substantial threat, even with the humour being injected not only by Espurr having camera fright, but also the recurring gag of her attempt to handshake everyone she meets… even when they can’t actually handshake. Welp, at least she’s learning.

There’s also a very, very substantial connection to the Gates to Infinity games here, with the heroes of that title being much more predominant heroes here with their own city. Which does make sense given what they end up doing, but it’s still something to consider. And of course, we get some additional exposition from Tricky later on to help. Hyperactive but clever girl she is. Still, it’s a nice play on that bit of lore.

Oh, I think we still have the statues from Super in play so… that’s going to lead to some interesting worries later on.

The chapters are on the slower side, but do help advance the worldbuilding and development of the cast, with a few funny moments thrown in for good measure. Overall, it was a fun read. Now it’s diverging away from the original version of this story, I’m liking some of the new changes here and I’m looking forward to see how they evolve further!
 

Chibi Pika

Stay positive
Staff
Location
somewhere in spacetime
Pronouns
they/them
Partners
  1. pikachu-chibi
  2. lugia
  3. palkia
  4. lucario-shiny
  5. incineroar-starr
Heya! It's been a while since I checked this out, but I saw that you posted several chapters recently and even finishing book 1 so I figured I should catch up again! I read through my previous review to refresh myself and was again amazed at how much better the pacing was in this version of the fic. And it looks like things are moving along pretty quickly!

> It looked more ancient than a year-old loaf of bread.
This is is funny to me because a year is extremely old for bread but not old at all for a book.

I love so many of the quirky little bits of phrasing that you use in your descriptions. Like, it's easy to convey that a room is messy, but saying it triggered her fight-or-flight instinct is just hilarious and unexpected and the reader will undoubtedly generate their own image of what that looks like which is better than any specific description could be.

Oh no, I feel bad for Tricky here. It's easy to see why she got her hopes up regarding Ampharos's offer, buuuuut it's also very obvious why Espurr is so concerned. 🫠

Magic class! Er, I mean--attacks class! Alas, despite making a bit of headway with the tin cans earlier with Nuzleaf, Espurr is unable to generate anything here. But I coulda sworn that she was able to do it when she imagined firing at Pancham...

Oh boy, and then Pancham goes and volunteers, this has Gilderoy's DADA lesson written all over it. :copyka:

Man, I was so ready for her to nail him so when he punched her, it hit hard. C'monnnn Espurr, you can get him in that smug face of his.

Progress Toward Espurr's Explosion: 100%

Okay, the interesting thing about this is that I know you're playing extremely fast and loose with PMD canon, but it's still easy to have expectations colored by canon. But here we have two elements of canon playing against each other in the form of Hydreigon and Ampharos. Is Ampharos a doddering old eccentric, or an actual sinister figure? Is Hydreigon a well-meaning guardian spirit, or something much darker? One of them has gotta be playing against canon.

...and as this scene progresses, I'm definitely getting the feeling that it's Hydreigon. This ain't the benevolent Voice of Life we saw in Gates. And even if Hydreigon were genuine, just stopping Ampharos is a pretty small thing for a summoned human hero. Like, I feel like a lot of people could do that! So that's another point in favor of him not telling the whole truth here.

Interesting that she can't sense Simipour's emotions, I can't remember if that came up before.

Huh, I forgot Pancham's thoughts were veiled to her too...

>"I'd love it," she finally said, regretting her words all the way.
Oh boy. :copyka2:

It's funny, I have no idea whether to expect Nuzleaf to be involved in the Dark Matter stuff like in canon. It's really funny how this game novelization has me on my toes so much.

It feels a bit odd to have her accept Nuzleaf's adoption offer without so much as a thought about how she might be going back to earth soon, but in the very next scene with Tricky and Goomy, her imminent departure is her main concern... and it's so imminent that she can't even have a sleepover!

Oh my, some more extensive backstory. Big ouch at the scene with her making dinner for her parents. And the crushing pressure leading to collapsing social life and snapping at Daniel. Mann...

This really recontextualizes her wanting to go back home in a previous chapter. Although, I remember her listed reasons for wanting to go home were kind of charmingly mundane? Like, "I would like to study for my test" as opposed to the soul-crushing anxiety and impossibly high standards that we're seeing here.

How dare you make me love Tricky. She's being perfectly reasonable here. And Espurr is being silly! I love the "then why are you here?" retort in response to Espurr saying it's not safe. I know I brought it up in my last review but it really is astounding how much more likeable Tricky now.

Aaand just like that, Ampharos is arrested. His being here at all feels verrry circumstantial... he's way too easy a scapegoat. Scape-sheep?

Oh geez the Coneheads are legit scary here. Some real solid tension from this dungeon chase.

All of these chapters have had excellent music choice, but I gotta give particular shout-out to Erased. :okgon:

Dying at Espurr being like “another meteor?” in response to learning about the previous world crises.

Tricky-logic is a bit ridiculous but like, I get it. And her conclusion that Nuzleaf is the most suspicious is actually pretty sound (even if we pretend that we haven't played Super).

Very amusing that Watchog the watching Pokémon is bad at watching,

Pancham, why do you keep insisting that "troublemaker" is some sort of sick burn, most kids would find that a badge of honor. And you're not exactly a goody-two-shoes yourself! Oh, I see, being a troublemaker is bad and cringe, but delinquent energy is cool and based.

There is no way hes gonna get Deerling of all mon to start a random pointless brawl in this forest lmao.

Ohh man, this scene with Nuzleaf. Immediate bad vibes. Yeah, I'm veering on the side of canon with this one, Nuzleaf ain't friendly.

Oh, that was super clever that Espurr asked about her friends to immediately get an indicator of whether or not he was lying. Of course he'd tell her that they were confirmed safe, and of course she'd know that they're not. But then it turned out that he's an offworlder?? :eyes: Now that is definitely an intriguing addition. I'm immediately curious how he got here since it doesn't seem like he'd have been summoned by Mew.

I'm with amby, I don't think Nuzleaf will be petrified forever. This definitely isn't the last we've seen of him.

Man and after all that no flag. :sadbees: Big time "we saved the day but lost the house cup" energy. But of course, there was no way they were gonna be flunked for it, let's be real.

Aw, and Audino ends up being her guardian after all, that was sweet.

Finally, the psychic cat has met the electric sheep! In the end, Ampharos wasn't sinister at all, lol. But of course, it's good fun to have the kids spend all book suspecting him and then be dead wrong. But also, it makes me very curious why exactly Nuzleaf and Hydreigon wanted him out of the picture...

I'll be honest, I briefly thought Nuzleaf was working for Hydreigon in the previous scene, but this one is giving pretty big Dark Matter vibes. So then, the queston is whether Hydreigon is also an agent of Dark Matter, or a form taken by DM, or what. Either way, very nicely unsettling vibes here. :copyka:

And that's a wrap on Book 1! Overall the pacing was really solid and we get a nice sense of resolution there at the end. It feels like this book was our main trio coming together, and now that they're a proper adventuring team, they'll be able to branch out more come Book 2, maybe start to get an idea of what the world crisis that Espurr was summoned for...

I think that's all for now, but I'll be back to review the special episode soon enough!
 

Ambyssin

Gotta go back. Back to the past.
Location
Residency hell
Pronouns
he/him
Partners
  1. silvally-dragon
  2. necrozma-ultra
  3. milotic
  4. zoroark-soda
  5. dreepy
  6. mewtwo-ambyssin
  7. vulpix-ambyssin
Long nights and early mornings made Archen a very cranky bird.
omg he just like me fr 😭
If only he could fly
Just evolve then. #SkillIssue
pulling an inked quill out of the bag Archen was holding
A moment of silence for the inky contents of Archen's bag. o7
HAPPI business
As opposed to sad business, angry business, etc.
for the lucario who delivers my stocks every week
Oh, they're totally dead.
Time is important on a job like this
Okay, Dialga.
Mawile held it up and snapped several pictures of their surroundings
But first, lemme take a selfie.
Hitched to the wagon sat a perfect stone statue of a lucario
F.
It was muscular, quadrupedal, and pitch-black. A bouquet of spines extended out of its back.
Unsure what this is supposed to be a void shadow of.
just like one of Jirachi's malfunctioning robots
I guess Jirachi is even more of a bumbling inventor in this iteration. Which means we'll inevitably come face to face with one of the malfunctioning robots.
At the last minute, they had sneakily turned in a pair of blank connection orbs, switched out with the ones that contained the photos
Aww yeah, civil disobedience.

If I had a nickel for every PMD fic where a hub location of a previous PMD game was all but wiped off the map by the Big Bad, I'd have two nickels. Which isn't a lot, but it's weird that it happened twice.

It seems that, if nothing else, this special episode shows that the stoning is far more widespread than we've been led to believe. And will, most likely, continue to get worse. It makes me wonder just how far this is going to spread and how much of the world is going to end up in the Voidlands before the heroes (presumably) manage to save the day. Cuz they're still gonna be doing Junior Explorer™ stuff. At least for the start of act 2. The scene with the mayor also makes me expect a good deal of "There is no war in Ba Sing Se" from the higher ups. A lot of obstructive bureaucrats and all that jazz. Probably giving vibes of the Ministry of Magic in the fourth and fifth Harry Potter books. Even if Prime Minister Salad is based off the minister from the sixth book. And I wonder if, despite Tricky's admiration for the Expedition Society and their general good standing with Kecleon, the group is not looked on favorably by folks in charge. Which would, of course, lead to confrontations with obstructive bureaucrats in the future.
 

Flyg0n

Flygon connoisseur
Pronouns
She/her
Partners
  1. flygon
  2. swampert
  3. ho-oh
  4. crobat
  5. orbeetle
  6. joltik
  7. salandit
  8. tyrantrum
  9. porygon
Very excited to get in on the revamped version! I'll go over the prologue and chapters 1 & 2 because that seems like a better introduction than just the prologue and chapter 1.

Her reflection in the river's cool, slow-moving water
Minor quibble, I did find this bit repetitive. Earlier the water is already described as cool, and a lin above that as slow, so it felt a bit unnecessary to say again. I personally my reword one of the descriptions.
CHAPTER ONE: I BECOME A FURRY
This is the greatest chapter title ever I love it
thought Wednesday was a deep purple colour,
NO thats WRONG wednesday isn't purple, if anything saturday or Tuesday is/?? Wednesday is obviously a warm rich orangey reddish shade what the heck??? 0/10, unfollowing this fic, Espurr is an unrelatable protag.

/j aside, I really liked this intro and description. I think its much more characterful and gives more of a personality than I remember from the previous version.
recognize her as a furry, tailed freak!
rood, ur not supposed to call furries freaks Espurr :/
Espurr's blurry eyes sliced through her fuzzy dreams and gave way to bright sunshine
I read this a few times and my best guess is eyes should be "vision"? If not, I am not sure 'eyes' read very clear to me.
Just Espurr," she said.
I did go 🤔 at this bit. I probably missed it but I don't recall her ever concretely thinking about Espurr or whyshe thinks this is her name/title? I know by narrative implication, the third person POV calls her Espurr, but I'd think there should be more of a "... All I can remember is Espurr" or someone calling her an Espurr?

But if they did and I missed it, my apologies! My quibble that crossed my mind as I read this.
Put that poor student back where you found them right now!"
PUT THAT THING BACK WHERE IT CAME FROM OR SO HELP ME :mewlulz:
Because..." Tricky trailed off, her tail swooshing erratically. It cramped up and she shuddered in pain. "They don't... you don't... just, c'mon! Pleeeaaase?"
:copyka: knowing/remembering bits of Tricky's backstory and character makes this bit quite juicy. Oh Tricky, poor thing. Knowing she's just very desperately hoping for a friend and someone who doesn't hate her/dislike her...

To be clear, I only vaguely remember the gist of the first version. That being said... Oh boy, I have got to say, this version reads great. A definite improvement in my opinion too. First, there's a lot more confidence that comes through as far as plot and characterization. But more importantly, there's so much more personality. It really feels like between the first and second versions, you really discovered your voice. The energy of the Snicket/Middle school school adventure Harry Potter bits comes through much stronger for me. A bit of wisecracking humor and self aware bits in the narration and wittiness throughout.

Also the Kansas/not in Kansas anymore is fantastic lol.

I am not entirely sure, but I vaguely recall struggling with Espurr's character in your first version. (And I juuust looked back on my old review, indeed I did). I think you improved in leaps and strides here in her voice and energy coming through a lot more. I get a much better sense of her weird kid vibes, her tendency towards following rules more than Tricky, her more observant and cautious nature but also that sort of 'older for their age' energy too that you get when a kid sort of grows up to fast (and YUM we get more backstory for her!!!).

Honestly I felt a lot more into her right from the get go than I remember being in the first version, even aside from getting her backstory. But also including more of that I think really helps here. That, and the fact that she seems to remember a lot ore about her past life? At least like, where she lived and pieces of who she is, just not her name. The only bit that I think I quibbled with there was I don't remember any concrete moment of Espurr reflecting on how her memories seem to be partially missing. (unless they're not missing?)

As far as I can tell she knows she's human, she knows where she lived and how she lived before coming here, and the thing she doesn't know is only her name. But by all means correct me if I overlooked a part! But not having her consciously acknowledge the gap is weird, unless thats on purpose for some later reason.

Tricky also shines brighter than I remember, I think there's more obvious depth clearer sense that there's something going on under the surface than before maybe? Or maybe its the same, but I do know that regardless, I think she's great here.

The most interesting other change is the Prologue, which is very different from the start of the previous version. I have no idea how it will become relevant, especially in the context of a PSMD story (which oops, I still don't remember clearly), but I am certainly looking forward to it. It feels a lot more interesting than what I remember from the previous version because it already implies a lot more. Rufus, this governing body, Mew appearing to Rufus (why him specifically?), and Mew apparently dying and trying to tell him to protect the next Human. It feels like more of a tease/prologue than just a beginning.

Honestly between the polish on the characters and the stories vibes/voice I really like the direction of this! Big kudos to you for rewriting! That's a daunting and really hard decision to make, but in this case I think it's worked really well for you and it makes me so happy to see all the improvements. Gud fic!
 

Chibi Pika

Stay positive
Staff
Location
somewhere in spacetime
Pronouns
they/them
Partners
  1. pikachu-chibi
  2. lugia
  3. palkia
  4. lucario-shiny
  5. incineroar-starr
And now for the Special Episode!

There's a real great feeling of tension and unease here, starting from the first few details that something is Off. Even just a well-traveled road being overgrown and a bunch of rotting berries. As with the previous chapters where Espurr's guardians got petrified, there's a fun bit of dramatic irony in the fact that of course the characters are going to assume "statues" instead of "actual person turned to stone."

The entire town getting stoned is wild. What could the reason be, what is DM’s game here… We've got the Coneheads serving him around Serenity, but they're a lot more discriminating, seemingly only going after Espurr in particular (and Ampharos?)

And then the thing appears. :copyka: Void shadow? I’m just gonna call it a void shadow even though it has a lot of original flair, it’s basically serving the same purpose in the story. In any case, the xenomorph-like design has always made them super memorable and distinct and way more intimidating than they were in Super.

Archen is verrry optimistic to expect holding up his guild badge to help here. :copyka2:

And holy moly blast seeds are OP in this setting, I was not expecting that. But then it survives the initial blast, only to dissolve into ash afterward, hm... Yeah, judging by the message that gets left for Mawile and Archen, these things definitely have a Plan in motion.

Oh, and of course Honchkrow is the worst. Wouldn't be proper children's adventure without unhelpful and infuriating authority figures. :unquag:

Anyway, this was the perfect spot to put this little detour, and we've got some nice intrigue set up for later. :copyka: On to book 2!
 
BOOK TWO--A Cruel Summer: Table of Contents New

SparklingEspeon

Back on Her Bullshit
Staff
Location
a Terrace of Indeterminate Location in Snowbelle
Pronouns
She/Her
Partners
  1. espurr
  2. fennekin
  3. zoroark
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Written and Illustrated by Sparkling Espeon

Beta read by Windskull, ShadowVulpi, Namohysip, and Inkedust

Dedicated to the weird kids, the troublemakers, the nerds,

The eccentrics, the bookworms of the world,


And to anyone who ever felt the walls watched them at night.

~\({O})/~

Book Two: A Cruel Summer

00. Prologue: I'm Counting On It
01. Deerling's Day
02. Ampharos Returns
03. Enter Merywether
04. Poliwrath River
05. The Clubhouse
06. Government
07. Fright Night
08. The Investigators
09. The Calm
10. The Storm
11. Elective School Field Trip
12. The Crooked House
13. The Other Side
14. Void and Shadow
15. All Together Now
16. What Came After
Special Episode II. When The World Was Cold
Special Episode II. Falling Through Time

[<- To Book One!]

Book Theme: Breaking Down - Florence and The Machine
 
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