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oh my turn came fast. i'd like to claim the review by kintsugi!

NOT SO FAST NEB. A Mew Me: Kuki's Tale - Chapter One Base: +3 900+ words: +3 Total: 96 + 6 = 102

Read Chapter 1! Boy, that ending sure took a turn. I was going to describe this story as very comfy before, but that nightmare injected a lot more depth and stakes in, as it surely can't be just a mere dream with that strange symbolism. The contrast took me by surprise, but I don't think it was...

time to ZOOM past neb Song of Two Worlds - Chapter 1 Base: +3 1500+ words: +4 Total: 89 + 7 = 96 (eciN)

Finally got around to checking this out. Here are my thoughts on Chapter 1. You'll either want to replace the comma with a period or uncapitalize "Sure", depending on if you want the lines to be from the same sentence. I think this could really use some breaking up into more paragraphs...

The Curious and The Shiny - Chapter 14 & 15 Base: +3 Weekly: +4 ~300 words: +2 Total: 80 + 9 = 89

Chapters 14 & 15 Colon seems weird here, but I think the whole structure is a bit iffy. Replacing the colon with a comma would make it sound like Curio was glistening, but removing it entirely doesn't read quite right either. Just a simple break up to "[...], looking deep into Mom's eyes. They...

Ah, yeah, I think I keep overestimating how reconstructable some elements of TPP are from the references... it's not a spoiler what it is, so I can just explain it now for clarity: In TPP, the biggest danger to progress was the PCs. Because the game doesn't let you recapture a mon after...

Splice of Life Base: +3 ~900 words: +3 Total: 74 + 6 = 80

God tier name, 10/10, review over, goodbye. No, let's talk a little more about this. So I will admit I know pretty little about Mewtwo lore, both the anime and the games. I did go and read some summaries on wikis, though, so I think I know the gist of them, and that this really is modified...

Oh, this is actually the first letter Shirlee sent Red, though. Before the surprise visit in Chapter 3, the communication had been entirely one-sided. Well, it's actually tied to where the time has been read. In the case of the 24-hour instances, Red reads the time from a digital clock - first...

Reviewed Chapter 3 of Places We Call Home. Base: +3 Weekly: +4 ~1400 words (frick): +3 Total: 64 + 10 = 74

Chapter 3 Comma doesn't fit here as there are only two items and the "both x and y" structure doesn't use a comma in general. *passing? "Lying" rather than "laying", and a comma is needed after "dam". *Regigigas - this typo appeared a couple times in this chapter. Needs to end in a...

You are not prepared. Here is Chapter 10, rated teen like before. --- CHAPTER TEN Bottom Text --- Today I learned that girls really don't like it when a guy they barely know chases after them. I'm calling double standards on this bullshit - no way they would've screamed had I been a girl as...

Thank you for the review, very long and juicy 👀 Good point - I did indeed use the pronouns with the idea that Barricade views his old self as a different person, but I guess I forgot the implications towards the end of the segment. I should make it clearer that Barry indeed goes through the...

two in one day hell yea The Origin of Storms - Chapter 1 Base: +3 ~600 words: +3 Total: 58 + 6 = 64

Hi there! I decided to check this out, and I've now read the first chapter. Here are some thoughts. So, Wobbuffet. Now that's a mon you don't often see used in fanfiction. And when you do, it's usually a comic relief side character. Here, though, it's almost eldritch - a memory of some sort of...

hyaagh gotta defend my spot The Curious and The Shiny - Chapter 13 Base: +3 Weekly: +4 100+ Words: +2 Total: 49 + 9 = 58

Chapter 13 huh that went better than expected Missing period. Mm, wouldn't it be "me and your brother have your back" since having someone's back is supporting them? *swum, though it's Curio speaking so idk Well... not sure if that checks out completely, but I guess I'll take a badass...

Decided to polish up this story from a year or so ago! It was originally written for the Genre Gambles writing game created by @kintsugi over at Bulbagarden Forums, where a player would receive a randomized prompt to write a story from. The prompt for this story was Alternate (category), Tragedy...