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Chapter Two italian swearing On the one hand this is thoughtful, but on the other I'd expect a lot of morphs named ShadowBlood DarkFury walking around With how much description this scene had of Salem's sensations, I was expecting a mention of the floor being cold but it didn't come...

Not all pokémon speak the same! Canine language is indeed limited to canines. It's also not just any canines, but sapient ones - only sapients can use complex verbal language like ours. Completely wild houndoom and other canine pokémon communicate like our wolves. I think my intention with the...

Hey! Here for Catnip. As you requested, I've read the revised first chapter. I skimmed the prologue for a recap as well, but I didn't pick up much that had changed so I have no comments to give there. As the second half of this chapter also seemed to match the content of the corresponding scene...

August 24th Game! Organizer: Canis Sign-ups open until Friday, Aug 27th 10:00 EST [countdown here] You have until the end of the countdown to submit your fic of choice. You may change it anytime up until the rolling takes place. Submit to me via TR or Discord DM. Review window opens: once...

It was basically different paths the conversation and Red's freaking out about the spider would have taken. So both in a way, I suppose. Well, I would argue that she was trying to de-escalate the situation once Red apologized and seemed to come more to his senses, which made the situation seem...

Hey there! I'm here for Catnip. I have to say, though, that this review might not hit 250 words - the story is very short, and I'm very unfamiliar with the source material. I hope it's alright. Missing another row change between these paragraphs. The characters seem to talk mostly in a...

I'm really glad to hear that went well! I spent so long going back and forth with that. Probably about half the outtakes I had for this chapter were the spider parts done slightly differently. This is true and it annoys me, but it is indeed because of plot reasons. I also think of Jordan as...

EDIT: I've been thinking about some things and I've decided I want to put up a disclaimer regarding the psychiatrist scene and about Red's "diagnosis" in general. Catch it under the spoiler. --- IT'S BEEN FOUR MONTHS AHAHA how did that happen? well, i guess summer job and a really difficult...

This question popped into my mind and it seemed like one better suited for a forum thread than just a Storycrafter ping. So: What - or who - are some inspirations behind your characters? Have they been inspired by some other fictional character or some real person you've known? Has seeing some...

Hey there, here for Catnip! Sorry that it's late. Anyway, I've read the first chapter, and here are my thoughts. Before I go into line commentary like I usually do, I'd like to point out whether I'm personally LGBT+ or on the autistic spectrum to establish the perspective I would have into...

July 27th Game! me when I activate Reading Mode Organizer: Canis Sign-ups open until Thursday, July 29th 10:00 EST [countdown here] You have until the end of the countdown to submit your fic of choice. You may change it anytime up until the rolling takes place. Submit to me via TR or...

Hey! Sorry it took a while, but I’ve now read the second chapter and here are my thoughts. You’ll be glad to hear I thought this chapter was a lot better than the first! A lot the issues I had with the first one weren’t present in this, and some were actually patched as your DMs promised. First...

Thank you both for the reviews! Sorry for the late replies, life's been hectic. Right, I should probably add that in the author's notes here as well instead of just in Hunter, Haunted: there is a story that bridges these two together called Metanoia, and it precisely answers why Red views Helix...

Hey there! I've read the first chapter of this story as per our review exchange agreement, and I am going to read and review the second as well, but I wanted to already post a review after the first due to all the thoughts I had about it. As a disclaimer, I am not someone who keeps up with the...

Hey there! I’ve read the draft of chapter 21 for Catnip and here is my review. Unfortunately, I couldn’t look at the bonus scenes due to some external personal reasons, but I hope this’ll be helpful enough with just the main chapter in focus. Not that many specific thoughts or critiques came to...

Hey there. I semi-randomly decided to check a bit of this out after hearing so much about it. I've read chapters 1 and 2, and here are my thoughts. First off, I gotta say I was surprised by the content warnings. The way this fic was spoken about made it seem rather dark, but those warnings look...

This is the second time now that someone's gotten the idea of them being the only ones that can use fire, so I should definitely work to better clear that up if I ever get to revising this story. To this day I haven't really figured out what the hierarchy of the houndoom pack is and how much...

Alright! It's been a while, but the hands of fate have finally slapped me into continuing this story via Catnip. I did have to do a bit of rereading to find the place where I'd last left off and to generally remind myself of everything that's happened recently in the story (and it definitely...

June 21st Game! (Happy Midsummer!) Organizer: Canis Sign-ups open until Thursday, June 24th 10:00 EST [countdown here] You have until the end of the countdown to submit your fic of choice. You may change it anytime up until the rolling takes place. Submit to me via TR or Discord DM. Review...

So I heard some people talking about this fic on the discord and I decided to check it out. I've read Chapter 1 and I want to give my thoughts on it, but unfortunately I have to say they're not very positive. Before I get deeper into the issues I personally had with this chapter, I have some...