Note: This review covers material that isn't on the TR Forums yet; I've done my best to contain all that to spoiler tags, but if you aren't caught up yet I'd suggest skipping over this until you are.
~Review of Special Episode 4 – Chapter 105~
So I was going to return to review at the end of Act II, but the ending of Act Two was RowlAnxiety, so I decided to go through everything currently existing instead! ….Mostly because once I get binge reading on something I can’t really stop myself. :V I broke off at Chapter 105 by the FFN counter when I ran out of steam, so that happened. Writing this all up while it’s fresh in my mind.
Anyways! This is a story that already had a pretty huge scope from the beginning, but once the last Guardian missions were squared away that scope really billowed out. I think the special episodes were what helped that along, introducing (or at least bringing into the spotlight) concepts like wraiths and the Revisor while the main plot in the present mostly dealt with a lower-stakes emotional arc for Owen and the rest of Team Alloy.
There’s definitely flaws—which is to be expected with a web serial this long and complicated, but IMO, these flaws have to do more with me feeling like things just went on for too long than it does me getting confused by all the things going on. Because, I haven’t really been confused thus far. I think things are beginning to spiral a little out of control in Act III, when we have like ten different POVs and some of them are floating out of focus for a bit (Quartz; Har), but for the most part I’ve been able to keep a surprisingly good hold on everything. Only thing that’s kind of getting me is the distinction between Void Basin and Chasm of the Void. From what I understand, Nate hides in one, and the other is just… evil? And corrupted Jerry’s family and possibly Spice? IDK, and I keep getting them mixed up.
So in the last review I said that I thought that Act II had a bit too much talking. And tbh I still kind of think that. Team Alloy’s whole “Do I have free will?” crisis, while interesting, was pretty much just talked out. Jerry’s “Why should I be honorable when the world just throws me down” thing was talked out. Even Eon is pretty much just interested in talking. Even with the battle between Team Alloy and Har’s group, this act was pretty much a slog for me to get through… until Step buried half of Kilo Village in a blizzard while attacking Rim. Then from there on out we get all the plot: Nevren drops his Anam bomb on Hot Spot, Eon makes his move, the wraiths move out into the Spirit World, Star goes axe murderer on Eon and Quartz HQ, Arceus finally steps fully into the fray, Gahi gets the psychic-orb, Dark Matter/”the Wraith King” makes its entrance, and Everyone Dies while Kilo enters its own personal 2020. It kind of feels like the two halves were distilled here a bit, rather than blended together.
That’s a lot of stuff to cover, and I have a bunch to say about the ending and Act III, but first I’ll do my best to cover all the intricacies of Act II, because like I said, there’s a lot.
Firstly, hands-down my favorite part of Act II was the Special Episodes. Admittedly it has a lot to do with the l o r e drops, but I enjoyed the flashes back to the past and the focus on characters who generally stayed in the background like Anam and Eon. Interesting that Anam got two, although I guess it needed to be that way to introduce Dark Matter. My favorite of those was definitely the first Anam one. I liked all the contrasting imagery from the books of Mew and Arceus, and the origins of some of the newer legends like Hecto. It’s not surprising to see why they disagreed, when there’s fundamental contradictions in their philosophies (“Don’t venture outside of what you were made to do, or you’ll live unhappily.” – Arceus; “Push your limits constantly, or you’ll never live.” – Mew) It was also interesting to get another look at Nate and where he came from.
Speaking of Nate, I’d long suspected he was a mimikyu, tbh. He’s also precious and does not deserve the revulsion he gets from almost everyone D: I wonder if it’s the Dark Orb that’s making him that big, or is he something that came about from Ancient/pre-Kilo? He mentions that he just ”woke up in the chasm of the void (I thiiink that’s the right one?) and felt he had to stay there”, and apparently he’s one of a kind, so…
Not sure how I feel about Har and company. Like, interesting concept, and it’s depth for Eon’s character, but so far they’ve pretty much just sat around in the background? I haven’t actually seen them affect the plot significantly at all in Act II outside of just existing, and so far in Act III they’ve been stuck at Trina’s crumbling palace. They’re kinda just…. There. Not sure if they’re gonna get used more in the future or something.
It was interesting to see more light shed on Eon and Arceus. In Act I, Eon was an enigma who wanted to get closer to Owen for unknown reasons and Arceus was just talked about. Here, they developed into their own distinct personalities—With Arceus actually being somewhat more sensible than Star, even if he’s got a stick up his arse, and Eon being an emotional parent figure who’s gone way too far on the pretense of seeing his “son” again. I don’t know how Nevren ended up thinking he’d be a good replacement for Star and Arceus, though. IMO, he’s worse.
And honestly, I don’t get Nevren. He seems like the type to be self-serving, or at least pretty calculating—so I don’t understand what he could possibly stand to gain by joining up with the Hunters instead of Anam. If he’s self-serving, then he had it made where he was. He was Anam’s right hand (…Paw? Gooey limb? I think he hates that idea), he had sway and influence in the Thousand Hearts, the resources to do whatever crazy experiments he wanted, Star’s trust, etc. I don’t understand why he would throw that all away for Eon. And if he legit thinks that Eon is a better leader than Star or Barky or even Anam would be, then I don’t understand how he came to that conclusion either. Because Eon is very clearly emotionally volatile and has been for centuries—that’s not a person you want to drop Ultimate Power into. And if he was using Eon as a means to an end and planned to betray him at some point… well, that’s not off the table, and it does make more sense than I anticipated, but even so, that’s eeeviiil. Since the only end I can think of is taking over after Star and Barky were gone.
Also, pretty sure that weird scene with him attacking Owen back in like… chapter six? Had something to do with the Revisor.
I have to say, from the moment the Wraiths were introduced my first thought was “Void shadows?” Fascinating to see that prediction was right.
Star goes hog-wild in Quartz HQ despite at least trying to be nice for the rest of Act II and now we finally get to see what she’s truly made of—Well meaning, but blinded by hate for people she fought thousands of years ago. Shortsighted and emotionally driven, wishing to change the world to what she thinks is best without any regard to what others think, and willing to use pokemon as tools if she deems it necessary. I wouldn’t say she’s pure evil, or even “evil”, really, but she’s trying to be holier-than-thou when she… really isn’t. I don’t think she deserves the #f*ckStar campaign trending against her quite yet, but she’s far from innocent and, just like she claims Eon does, won’t admit or even entertain that she’s wrong. I haven’t lost my sympathy yet for her—that was an awful way to die, after all, and not even Nevren deserves that—but my position at this point is “WTF. Be better.”
Literally no-one suspected Hecto to be a threat… until he was. :D
I’m not sure how I feel about Rim yet. I think this is a grey area character for me—it feels like she was just the caretaker for all those mutants and not a mastermind leading the plan, but she was also behind some of the guardian attacks, apparently fought her way into the Psychic Orb by brute force, and her priorities definitely align against Star. Although, granted, Star isn’t exactly in the right, so it’s hard to say how evil being against her makes you by virtue. I don’t think she deserved what she got from Star, though. The poor thing almost literally died of shock until Lavender saved her.
Poor Lavender does his best to save Rim but doesn’t realize that ‘rim’ isn’t the correct body specification… welp, hope Rim enjoys her new life as a cherrim, I guess.
Also, did that machine have the framework for every single pokemon (barring legends) written into it?
I feel like Gahi getting the Psychic Orb was somewhat poetic, since he got ragged on all the time for being dumb/dimwitted. And… he’s not the wisest. But he’s certainly not dumb! It fits him, tbh. The Unown are also interesting spirits—I hope we get to see a bit more of them beyond them just appearing for attacks and stuff.
I was expecting Dark Matter to get involved at some point, but didn’t realize it was Anam’s Voice/malevolent spirit up until the last special episode. It makes more sense than it should—I think it clicked for me halfway through their talk in the Ghost Orb. The perfect “Oh shit” reveal right before everything exploded.
I think Owen and Brandon’s heart-to-heart is one of the most satisfying scenes in the entire act. Firstly, we get to see Brandon again, who hasn’t been in the picture since they visited him in that factory—seriously, what has he been doing in there all those centuries—we get to see Owen actually treated as an equal, not as a crush or someone to be ordered around or protected, and also Brandon is a pokemon who can say “no u” to the legendaries and walk away unscathed. Which is pretty cathartic tbh.
Listening to: Voidlands – PSMD composerI also listened to this while reading Act III. I thought it was strangely appropriate.
~Review of Special Episode 4 – Chapter 105~
So I was going to return to review at the end of Act II, but the ending of Act Two was RowlAnxiety, so I decided to go through everything currently existing instead! ….Mostly because once I get binge reading on something I can’t really stop myself. :V I broke off at Chapter 105 by the FFN counter when I ran out of steam, so that happened. Writing this all up while it’s fresh in my mind.
Anyways! This is a story that already had a pretty huge scope from the beginning, but once the last Guardian missions were squared away that scope really billowed out. I think the special episodes were what helped that along, introducing (or at least bringing into the spotlight) concepts like wraiths and the Revisor while the main plot in the present mostly dealt with a lower-stakes emotional arc for Owen and the rest of Team Alloy.
There’s definitely flaws—which is to be expected with a web serial this long and complicated, but IMO, these flaws have to do more with me feeling like things just went on for too long than it does me getting confused by all the things going on. Because, I haven’t really been confused thus far. I think things are beginning to spiral a little out of control in Act III, when we have like ten different POVs and some of them are floating out of focus for a bit (Quartz; Har), but for the most part I’ve been able to keep a surprisingly good hold on everything. Only thing that’s kind of getting me is the distinction between Void Basin and Chasm of the Void. From what I understand, Nate hides in one, and the other is just… evil? And corrupted Jerry’s family and possibly Spice? IDK, and I keep getting them mixed up.
So in the last review I said that I thought that Act II had a bit too much talking. And tbh I still kind of think that. Team Alloy’s whole “Do I have free will?” crisis, while interesting, was pretty much just talked out. Jerry’s “Why should I be honorable when the world just throws me down” thing was talked out. Even Eon is pretty much just interested in talking. Even with the battle between Team Alloy and Har’s group, this act was pretty much a slog for me to get through… until Step buried half of Kilo Village in a blizzard while attacking Rim. Then from there on out we get all the plot: Nevren drops his Anam bomb on Hot Spot, Eon makes his move, the wraiths move out into the Spirit World, Star goes axe murderer on Eon and Quartz HQ, Arceus finally steps fully into the fray, Gahi gets the psychic-orb, Dark Matter/”the Wraith King” makes its entrance, and Everyone Dies while Kilo enters its own personal 2020. It kind of feels like the two halves were distilled here a bit, rather than blended together.
That’s a lot of stuff to cover, and I have a bunch to say about the ending and Act III, but first I’ll do my best to cover all the intricacies of Act II, because like I said, there’s a lot.
Firstly, hands-down my favorite part of Act II was the Special Episodes. Admittedly it has a lot to do with the l o r e drops, but I enjoyed the flashes back to the past and the focus on characters who generally stayed in the background like Anam and Eon. Interesting that Anam got two, although I guess it needed to be that way to introduce Dark Matter. My favorite of those was definitely the first Anam one. I liked all the contrasting imagery from the books of Mew and Arceus, and the origins of some of the newer legends like Hecto. It’s not surprising to see why they disagreed, when there’s fundamental contradictions in their philosophies (“Don’t venture outside of what you were made to do, or you’ll live unhappily.” – Arceus; “Push your limits constantly, or you’ll never live.” – Mew) It was also interesting to get another look at Nate and where he came from.
Speaking of Nate, I’d long suspected he was a mimikyu, tbh. He’s also precious and does not deserve the revulsion he gets from almost everyone D: I wonder if it’s the Dark Orb that’s making him that big, or is he something that came about from Ancient/pre-Kilo? He mentions that he just ”woke up in the chasm of the void (I thiiink that’s the right one?) and felt he had to stay there”, and apparently he’s one of a kind, so…
Not sure how I feel about Har and company. Like, interesting concept, and it’s depth for Eon’s character, but so far they’ve pretty much just sat around in the background? I haven’t actually seen them affect the plot significantly at all in Act II outside of just existing, and so far in Act III they’ve been stuck at Trina’s crumbling palace. They’re kinda just…. There. Not sure if they’re gonna get used more in the future or something.
It was interesting to see more light shed on Eon and Arceus. In Act I, Eon was an enigma who wanted to get closer to Owen for unknown reasons and Arceus was just talked about. Here, they developed into their own distinct personalities—With Arceus actually being somewhat more sensible than Star, even if he’s got a stick up his arse, and Eon being an emotional parent figure who’s gone way too far on the pretense of seeing his “son” again. I don’t know how Nevren ended up thinking he’d be a good replacement for Star and Arceus, though. IMO, he’s worse.
And honestly, I don’t get Nevren. He seems like the type to be self-serving, or at least pretty calculating—so I don’t understand what he could possibly stand to gain by joining up with the Hunters instead of Anam. If he’s self-serving, then he had it made where he was. He was Anam’s right hand (…Paw? Gooey limb? I think he hates that idea), he had sway and influence in the Thousand Hearts, the resources to do whatever crazy experiments he wanted, Star’s trust, etc. I don’t understand why he would throw that all away for Eon. And if he legit thinks that Eon is a better leader than Star or Barky or even Anam would be, then I don’t understand how he came to that conclusion either. Because Eon is very clearly emotionally volatile and has been for centuries—that’s not a person you want to drop Ultimate Power into. And if he was using Eon as a means to an end and planned to betray him at some point… well, that’s not off the table, and it does make more sense than I anticipated, but even so, that’s eeeviiil. Since the only end I can think of is taking over after Star and Barky were gone.
Also, pretty sure that weird scene with him attacking Owen back in like… chapter six? Had something to do with the Revisor.
I have to say, from the moment the Wraiths were introduced my first thought was “Void shadows?” Fascinating to see that prediction was right.
Star goes hog-wild in Quartz HQ despite at least trying to be nice for the rest of Act II and now we finally get to see what she’s truly made of—Well meaning, but blinded by hate for people she fought thousands of years ago. Shortsighted and emotionally driven, wishing to change the world to what she thinks is best without any regard to what others think, and willing to use pokemon as tools if she deems it necessary. I wouldn’t say she’s pure evil, or even “evil”, really, but she’s trying to be holier-than-thou when she… really isn’t. I don’t think she deserves the #f*ckStar campaign trending against her quite yet, but she’s far from innocent and, just like she claims Eon does, won’t admit or even entertain that she’s wrong. I haven’t lost my sympathy yet for her—that was an awful way to die, after all, and not even Nevren deserves that—but my position at this point is “WTF. Be better.”
Literally no-one suspected Hecto to be a threat… until he was. :D
I’m not sure how I feel about Rim yet. I think this is a grey area character for me—it feels like she was just the caretaker for all those mutants and not a mastermind leading the plan, but she was also behind some of the guardian attacks, apparently fought her way into the Psychic Orb by brute force, and her priorities definitely align against Star. Although, granted, Star isn’t exactly in the right, so it’s hard to say how evil being against her makes you by virtue. I don’t think she deserved what she got from Star, though. The poor thing almost literally died of shock until Lavender saved her.
Poor Lavender does his best to save Rim but doesn’t realize that ‘rim’ isn’t the correct body specification… welp, hope Rim enjoys her new life as a cherrim, I guess.
Also, did that machine have the framework for every single pokemon (barring legends) written into it?
I feel like Gahi getting the Psychic Orb was somewhat poetic, since he got ragged on all the time for being dumb/dimwitted. And… he’s not the wisest. But he’s certainly not dumb! It fits him, tbh. The Unown are also interesting spirits—I hope we get to see a bit more of them beyond them just appearing for attacks and stuff.
I was expecting Dark Matter to get involved at some point, but didn’t realize it was Anam’s Voice/malevolent spirit up until the last special episode. It makes more sense than it should—I think it clicked for me halfway through their talk in the Ghost Orb. The perfect “Oh shit” reveal right before everything exploded.
I think Owen and Brandon’s heart-to-heart is one of the most satisfying scenes in the entire act. Firstly, we get to see Brandon again, who hasn’t been in the picture since they visited him in that factory—seriously, what has he been doing in there all those centuries—we get to see Owen actually treated as an equal, not as a crush or someone to be ordered around or protected, and also Brandon is a pokemon who can say “no u” to the legendaries and walk away unscathed. Which is pretty cathartic tbh.
Okay! So. Act II ending. This is my other issue with Act II in general—it feels like the ending isn’t really an ending so much as it is a cliffhanger for Act III. I got no sense of conclusion really, and everything was left dangling and up in the air. My impressions from reading the end of Act II were:
The Voidlands was something I had admittedly expected to see due to some chance spoiler stuff, but not quite like this. I had thought it was going to be some weird extension of the spirit world or something that got added onto Kilo, or a place that the entire Hot Spot crew escaped to after Kilo was destroyed completely; maybe where all the legendaries were banished. But at the end of the day, I was expecting it to be a refuge/a second Hot Spot, not… this.
This is pretty much the closest I’ve seen to the Voidlands being played straight in a fic, though. Short of the void titans, it’s pretty much what you’d expect to see from someone roaming the canon Super voidlands, down to the legendaries being there and all. I have a bunch of negatives and positives for this particular section of the plot.
My biggest negative, I think, is how much stuff that’s being added onto the plot here. All the exposition and worldbuilding about how a civilization would thrive in the pokemon equivalent of Hell is cool and all, but it’s a whole new set of characters in an already sprawling plot that covers eons and probably over fifty characters already. I can’t even list all the relevant characters in HoC from memory and now there’s like fifteen more, and going by each Act’s overall count of forty-something chapters, I don’t really see how it’s all going to breathe. We have:
On one hand, I can see the merits. Like, giving Owen the chance to stand up for himself by placing him in a barren wasteland and incapacitating his role models/””commanders”” one by one. On the other hand, I don’t feel like I’m getting any real answers here. Much like Owen, we’re just being led along with a carrot on a stick with the promise of answers, but each answer is just a mirage that’s replaced with more questions.
an act I’m pretty sure is happening at this point with the current scope, I feel like that would really be pushing it for me. I guess what I want to see here is more answers and for something to finally change for Owen, because it feels like all he’s been doing is sitting around and waiting for his memories to come back and hoping reality gives him a break like it hasn’t for five centuries or something. I don’t want him to just lie down and take another round of the universe going “No u” and yeeting his character development back three years.
That said, there are a lot of cool ideas flowing around here, like Void Titans, which are presumably amalgamations of void shadows built around the legendaries (?), and Cypher City. I’m curious to see what makes a civilization in the voidlands, presumably a centuries old one filled with pokemon who don’t naturally “die”, tick. Where do they get their bread and cheese and fake meats from? Are they farming it? How do they do that without the sun; can you even grow anything there? Aside from dead trees and poisoned berries. Also tribes in the Voidlands—there seem to be some, since they cooked Owen’s dead body, so I’m kind of just wondering how they haven’t died out yet. Wandering around the wilderness like Owen and co. did is clearly not sustainable.
Also, Owen literally eating himself was twisted. I should have taken that more seriously when you mentioned it in the discord :failmander:
I wonder why he didn’t remember his first death, though…
I also appreciated how absolutely desperate and hopeless you made it feel when Owen was wandering around and searching for the others. You weave his encroaching madness as he gets more and more insane into the prose almost flawlessly, and for perhaps the first time in this story, death actually feels like death. When Amia dies, there’s no guarantee she’ll just float into the Aura Sea and be resurrected in her orb in a few minutes. It feels barren and empty; there’s no time for Owen to mourn or even bury the body.
Parts of this that struck me the most vividly were the paragraph with the rock, Owen eating himself, Amia’s death, and when he finally gives up and drinks the water that may or may not be poisonous but he doesn’t care because he’s just too thirsty at that point.
So gold protect barriers = affiliated with Necrozma… (I know that wasn’t confirmed but it basically is so.) now I have to go back and see who had a gold protect at some point. Clearly, there’s more than one gold protect user walking around if stuff works the same way in Kilo.
I wonder what Star commissioned from Angelo? Welp, guess it doesn’t matter now, because he’s about to be traumatized 20 times working for the Thousand Hearts! :D
When push comes to shove, I get what he’s talking about when he doesn’t want to touch Heart work with a thirty-foot pole. Since it seems like all his ancestors were short-lived due to Heart Work, he’s got an aversion to it—and in any other situation, I wouldn’t support dragging him out of his art hidey hole to help with the hospital. I think he kind of does have to go this time, though, since it’s all hands on deck here and he does have the power. It isn’t very nice that people are just nagging him for everything, though. I wonder where you’re going to take him, because it feels like he’s pretty immovable on the “I don’t wanna do anything but draw for the rest of my life” stance and emergency work in Kilo is not helping with that.
Why does everyone hate Nate?? I mean
Yes
Kilo Village is technically under attack from something that looks similar to Nate
But also like
He declared he was friendly and had backing from Rhys?
Also, because I haven’t covered the Kilo stuff yet and there’s still a lot to go through, Rhys’ speech was a very strong moment, IMO. It simultaneously showed off the hopelessness of their situation while giving the pokemon of Kilo Village a sense of hope.
Also, OMG, Step. Think before you judge >.>
I get that she’s like, tribal/old fashioned or whatever, but the amount of empathy she lacks is scary. If pokemon like Star and Eon are too emotional for power like Step claims, Step is the opposite extreme—she’s cold to a point where she lacks any emotion or understanding of others’ predicaments. I can’t say I like her too much.
Also, what’s up with Emily? That storm proooobably isn’t good. And we still don’t have an answer for why her being the original Dragon guardian was under Divine Decree…
I don’t know if I have too much to say on the Jerry episode, but it was interesting. I’m gonna assume whatever they got off Void Basin is what’s corrupting/mucking with Spice, since she likes to go there. Also wasn’t entirely clear on what happened to Jeremy—My current assumption is that he was being abuse and Brigid killed him? That’s what I’m gleaning from it.
I think I’ve noticed that each arc so far has had its own theme. Arc I was memories and growth; Owen was thrust into a world he never even realized existed, told he was older than he could even fathom and everything he knew was a lie—which in itself was just a lie just to cover up more lies. It’s down to him to grow out of that, and by the end of the arc he and the rest of the Alloy have conquered their beserkness and evolved fully. Arc II was Denial and Free Will. Owen and the rest of Team Alloy are forced to confront how much free will they actually have, and the more independence they gain, the more they realize that everyone around them is just looking to use or coddle them in some way. Star wants Owen there because he’s an important piece on the board, Eon just wants his pokemon/”son” back but doesn’t recognize that Owen isn’t a baby to be coddled around, etc. Har struggles with his identity, and the rest of them had their memories removed so they could be free of the grief of being copies. Meanwhile, Nevren pulls Anam under his control, thus taking away his free will as well. And throughout all of this, every single one of them is denying—either through willful shutting out or complete ignorance—the actual eldritch abomination that strikes them all down the moment they leave it unchecked.I guess in some twisted way this arc also works as a metaphor for climate change… somehow. :V Arc III is looking to be recovery and unity. Owen and pretty much everyone he knows gets thrown into the Voidlands, to varying degrees of lucidity. Some of them are shells of their former self, and Owen has lost all his powers. None of them stand a chance unless they all band together. Meanwhile, Kilo is pretty much on fire, and it’s down to all of the pokemon there to save themselves, instead of waiting on Anam and the Thousand Hearts to do it for them. None of them are out of the woods yet, and they’ll have to recover and build up their strength and unity for when that final battle is upon them.
My overall thoughts are that Hands of Creation is a very sprawling, original, well thought-out epic that wields a double-edged sword: the very details that make it pop with life and tick underneath the surface are the ones that sometimes make it bloat too much, or carry a plotline on way too long, or slow the pacing to a snail’s halt. It seems to carry strong themes of memories and how the past makes the future, and indeed a lot of this story does take place in the past. However, it’s layered in such a way so that nothing ever becomes confusing or feels like too much, and the characters, while seemingly exaggerated and goofy at first, take a surprisingly serious turn later on.
I think the biggest merits here are the world and the rich lore—As I’ve said before, Kilo feels lived-in and ancient rather than just a façade, and that’s only gotten more and more evident the more we delve into its past. Its clear that you actually have a vast lorebook and aren’t just making this all up on the fly, and I’m interested to see what parts of that are revealed next. Despite how dense it is, though, it’s definitely one of those stories that can keep the pages turning when it gets good—in no small part due to the manageable chapter lengths and the simple prose.
Anyways, I’m ending this review on the perfect wordcount of 4,444 words, so bye for now, I guess. I’ll try to return again once you wrap up Act III. Maybe I’ll be surprised and you’ll find a way to end it all there, but tbh I’m expecting an Act IV at least. There’s just way too much to wrap up in a single act without squishing some stuff.
Until next time!
~SparklingEspeon
- Star is dead
- Owen is dead??
- EVERYONE IS DEAD
- Wtf is Nate doing is he part of Dark Matter or something :worriedgoo:
- Well. Everything’s gone to crap. Act III is going to be a ride.
- ….Why don’t I feel satisfied, though? I’m just…. Empty.
The Voidlands was something I had admittedly expected to see due to some chance spoiler stuff, but not quite like this. I had thought it was going to be some weird extension of the spirit world or something that got added onto Kilo, or a place that the entire Hot Spot crew escaped to after Kilo was destroyed completely; maybe where all the legendaries were banished. But at the end of the day, I was expecting it to be a refuge/a second Hot Spot, not… this.
This is pretty much the closest I’ve seen to the Voidlands being played straight in a fic, though. Short of the void titans, it’s pretty much what you’d expect to see from someone roaming the canon Super voidlands, down to the legendaries being there and all. I have a bunch of negatives and positives for this particular section of the plot.
My biggest negative, I think, is how much stuff that’s being added onto the plot here. All the exposition and worldbuilding about how a civilization would thrive in the pokemon equivalent of Hell is cool and all, but it’s a whole new set of characters in an already sprawling plot that covers eons and probably over fifty characters already. I can’t even list all the relevant characters in HoC from memory and now there’s like fifteen more, and going by each Act’s overall count of forty-something chapters, I don’t really see how it’s all going to breathe. We have:
- Owen’s past as a Charmander in Kanto, + his history with Necrozma and the other legendaries
- Zena and Amia are shells of what they were
- Evil father, evil voidland kingdom who’s after Owen even if they don’t know it yet
- Slightly less evil father and his presumable ‘make up with Owen’ plan
- Almost all the legendaries are hanging around the voidlands somewhere, and are probably going have to be recovered in some way
- Now Anam and Dark Matter are in the mix
- Mewtwo’s on his way to mess Null Village up
- Rhys at the factory
- Corrupted Emily and her storm
- Pandemonium in Kilo Village and Angelo trying to adjust
- Whatever Har and co. are doing right now idk I lost track
- Nevren and Rim and Quartz
- Spice and her weird void powers
- Jerry flashback
On one hand, I can see the merits. Like, giving Owen the chance to stand up for himself by placing him in a barren wasteland and incapacitating his role models/””commanders”” one by one. On the other hand, I don’t feel like I’m getting any real answers here. Much like Owen, we’re just being led along with a carrot on a stick with the promise of answers, but each answer is just a mirage that’s replaced with more questions.
- Owen was a Charmander named “Smallflame” from Kanto? Cool, but then doesn’t that negate almost everything we already knew about Eon and the Alloy? Where did Gahi, Mispy, and Demitri come from? Why are they able to fuse in the first place? How is Eon connected to this?
- There’s a village in the Voidlands, and Owen and Jerry are safe! But syke, turns out that village is just the doormat to an entire Voidland kingdom, and in that kingdom there’s a Hydreigon that’s probably Owen’s father for some reason? And also he’s evil? And also Owen is a hot product here? And also there are legendaries here? And Also Owen was like the student of the third counterpart to Star and Barky, who definitely wasn’t Necrozma? When did Z-crystals get involved in this?
- We finally get to see Cypher City! But that’s only to introduce like four more characters who are likely going to get their arcs over the course of the voidlands conflict.
- See where I’m going with this?
That said, there are a lot of cool ideas flowing around here, like Void Titans, which are presumably amalgamations of void shadows built around the legendaries (?), and Cypher City. I’m curious to see what makes a civilization in the voidlands, presumably a centuries old one filled with pokemon who don’t naturally “die”, tick. Where do they get their bread and cheese and fake meats from? Are they farming it? How do they do that without the sun; can you even grow anything there? Aside from dead trees and poisoned berries. Also tribes in the Voidlands—there seem to be some, since they cooked Owen’s dead body, so I’m kind of just wondering how they haven’t died out yet. Wandering around the wilderness like Owen and co. did is clearly not sustainable.
Also, Owen literally eating himself was twisted. I should have taken that more seriously when you mentioned it in the discord :failmander:
I wonder why he didn’t remember his first death, though…
I also appreciated how absolutely desperate and hopeless you made it feel when Owen was wandering around and searching for the others. You weave his encroaching madness as he gets more and more insane into the prose almost flawlessly, and for perhaps the first time in this story, death actually feels like death. When Amia dies, there’s no guarantee she’ll just float into the Aura Sea and be resurrected in her orb in a few minutes. It feels barren and empty; there’s no time for Owen to mourn or even bury the body.
Parts of this that struck me the most vividly were the paragraph with the rock, Owen eating himself, Amia’s death, and when he finally gives up and drinks the water that may or may not be poisonous but he doesn’t care because he’s just too thirsty at that point.
So gold protect barriers = affiliated with Necrozma… (I know that wasn’t confirmed but it basically is so.) now I have to go back and see who had a gold protect at some point. Clearly, there’s more than one gold protect user walking around if stuff works the same way in Kilo.
I wonder what Star commissioned from Angelo? Welp, guess it doesn’t matter now, because he’s about to be traumatized 20 times working for the Thousand Hearts! :D
When push comes to shove, I get what he’s talking about when he doesn’t want to touch Heart work with a thirty-foot pole. Since it seems like all his ancestors were short-lived due to Heart Work, he’s got an aversion to it—and in any other situation, I wouldn’t support dragging him out of his art hidey hole to help with the hospital. I think he kind of does have to go this time, though, since it’s all hands on deck here and he does have the power. It isn’t very nice that people are just nagging him for everything, though. I wonder where you’re going to take him, because it feels like he’s pretty immovable on the “I don’t wanna do anything but draw for the rest of my life” stance and emergency work in Kilo is not helping with that.
Why does everyone hate Nate?? I mean
Yes
Kilo Village is technically under attack from something that looks similar to Nate
But also like
He declared he was friendly and had backing from Rhys?
Also, because I haven’t covered the Kilo stuff yet and there’s still a lot to go through, Rhys’ speech was a very strong moment, IMO. It simultaneously showed off the hopelessness of their situation while giving the pokemon of Kilo Village a sense of hope.
Also, OMG, Step. Think before you judge >.>
I get that she’s like, tribal/old fashioned or whatever, but the amount of empathy she lacks is scary. If pokemon like Star and Eon are too emotional for power like Step claims, Step is the opposite extreme—she’s cold to a point where she lacks any emotion or understanding of others’ predicaments. I can’t say I like her too much.
Also, what’s up with Emily? That storm proooobably isn’t good. And we still don’t have an answer for why her being the original Dragon guardian was under Divine Decree…
I don’t know if I have too much to say on the Jerry episode, but it was interesting. I’m gonna assume whatever they got off Void Basin is what’s corrupting/mucking with Spice, since she likes to go there. Also wasn’t entirely clear on what happened to Jeremy—My current assumption is that he was being abuse and Brigid killed him? That’s what I’m gleaning from it.
I think I’ve noticed that each arc so far has had its own theme. Arc I was memories and growth; Owen was thrust into a world he never even realized existed, told he was older than he could even fathom and everything he knew was a lie—which in itself was just a lie just to cover up more lies. It’s down to him to grow out of that, and by the end of the arc he and the rest of the Alloy have conquered their beserkness and evolved fully. Arc II was Denial and Free Will. Owen and the rest of Team Alloy are forced to confront how much free will they actually have, and the more independence they gain, the more they realize that everyone around them is just looking to use or coddle them in some way. Star wants Owen there because he’s an important piece on the board, Eon just wants his pokemon/”son” back but doesn’t recognize that Owen isn’t a baby to be coddled around, etc. Har struggles with his identity, and the rest of them had their memories removed so they could be free of the grief of being copies. Meanwhile, Nevren pulls Anam under his control, thus taking away his free will as well. And throughout all of this, every single one of them is denying—either through willful shutting out or complete ignorance—the actual eldritch abomination that strikes them all down the moment they leave it unchecked.
My overall thoughts are that Hands of Creation is a very sprawling, original, well thought-out epic that wields a double-edged sword: the very details that make it pop with life and tick underneath the surface are the ones that sometimes make it bloat too much, or carry a plotline on way too long, or slow the pacing to a snail’s halt. It seems to carry strong themes of memories and how the past makes the future, and indeed a lot of this story does take place in the past. However, it’s layered in such a way so that nothing ever becomes confusing or feels like too much, and the characters, while seemingly exaggerated and goofy at first, take a surprisingly serious turn later on.
I think the biggest merits here are the world and the rich lore—As I’ve said before, Kilo feels lived-in and ancient rather than just a façade, and that’s only gotten more and more evident the more we delve into its past. Its clear that you actually have a vast lorebook and aren’t just making this all up on the fly, and I’m interested to see what parts of that are revealed next. Despite how dense it is, though, it’s definitely one of those stories that can keep the pages turning when it gets good—in no small part due to the manageable chapter lengths and the simple prose.
Anyways, I’m ending this review on the perfect wordcount of 4,444 words, so bye for now, I guess. I’ll try to return again once you wrap up Act III. Maybe I’ll be surprised and you’ll find a way to end it all there, but tbh I’m expecting an Act IV at least. There’s just way too much to wrap up in a single act without squishing some stuff.
Until next time!
~SparklingEspeon
Listening to: Voidlands – PSMD composer