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Reviewed chapter 25 of Legendarian Chronicles https://forums.thousandroads.net/index.php?threads/the-legendarian-chronicles.48/post-16712 593 words I believe. No theme for this week ofc

I feel obliged t leave a review cause idk, why not? I'm going to be frank. Cause I like this story. So far I don't have any problems with grammar, plot, pacing, prose etc. I think its all very solid. really enjoyable. The reveal that Starr is apparently Giovanni's daughter is only mildly...

Ash, an Inspiration by Warmongers of Simora FFN Rating: K ASH AND OTHER CANON TRAINERS Adventure/Humor Keywords: Ash, Alola, alola fic, mentorship, team dynamics, mature ash Chaptered, Ongoing [This Ash-centric fic takes an unusual route. It picks up after Kalos, takes place in Alola...

Reviewed a section of LC. Not specifically a single chapter, but a broad overview. Doesn't count for the theme though. 1281 words. https://forums.thousandroads.net/index.php?threads/the-legendarian-chronicles.48/post-16656

So as long as review blitz is going, I figured I'd leave another review. Naturally, given I am coming into reading LC late and there's chapters upon chapters ahead of me, you can feel free to ignore any criticisms that will be addressed later. Alright, so I'll try my best to cover my thoughts...

Reviewed chap 1 of Suicune's Choice (which also qualifies for theme!) 697 words supposedly. https://forums.thousandroads.net/index.php?threads/the-suicunes-choice.265/post-16634

So I finally got around to reading this, figured I better review too! So lets begin! I'm going to try a new sort of rating system for myself, breaking it down into some main aspects I think every story needs in some way. [Main character, side characters, plot, subplot, prose...

https://forums.thousandroads.net/index.php?threads/in-the-streets-of-lago.447/post-16512 Reviewed Streets of Lago for catnip. Wordcounter says 1821 words. And I think this counts towards the theme too?

Here for my catnip! I have to say, I was definitely apprehensive when I first saw this story. I tend to be rather vanilla and simplistic when it comes to my pokemon stories. That said, I am rather impressed with what I see so far. I never read the first version, so everything I say is based on...

Wow, what an intense set of chapters. I was wondering when Jade when get up some guts and try and rescue Chibi. After everything Chibi did for her, it seems only fair. Really good read, very tense, lots of fast paced action. Huge fat bonus points for a Flygon!!!!! Loved the personality of the...

Ah, there it is. Glad to see the inclusion here, much more clear that she's actively trying not to think about poor Chibi. I really dig the inclusion of mentioning how other regions have different types of battles they favor. Ah Jade. Knowing moves is half the battle i'd think. How can you...

I've got one, this is about LC. @Chibi Pika It's very simple, so obvious. And I don't think anyone has said it yet, which is shocking. granted, I've only read up to chapter 8, but I know without a doubt I am right. Are you ready?????? Stalker is secretly Lugia in human form. Both are...

Since this concludes the S.S. Anne arc I figured I just give some brief thoughts. That was a pretty wild ride! Tense and a lot of crazy action stuff. (Still not sure how much I actually enjoy pokespeech as a thing but hey, its still interesting) You definitely captured and essence of being in...

Thank you for the feedback! This gives a lot of really good advice I'll be going over. I know going over the whole piece line by line is difficult, so I definitely appreciate everything you've done so far. Going over the rest of it isn't necessary, I think I understand the raw gist of it, its...

Well, I'm reading this potentially so I figured I'd have some fun and put some thoughts reactions. I'll admit, I tried twice before to read this but didn't get too far, got distracted. Stopped in chapter 1 usually. Clearly I was a fool for not reading far enough into chapter 1. Dark hair and...

Newest newest version. Tweaked the overall fight instead, especially the beginning. Tried to add more flow and narrative tension. Would love feedback to know if it's smoother, understandable and clear. Mild spoilers for Legendary Adventures. Tagging @Pen cause you read the first version and...

Even though I liked the final line, I decided to change it in this revision because I wanted to show why Koa decides to try and end the fight with a kick, since a kick is contextually appropiate

Thank you both for the input. Ok, so this is what I edited so far. I included some different verbiage, tried to vary the sentence length, and clear up pronoun confusion. It is supposed to be a bit climactic since it comes at the tail end of a bigger fight, so I want it to be somewhat...

Thank you for the feedback! I'll be reviewing my piece later today to see what I can do to get more into Koa's headspace as opposed to telling too much. This was some good advice.

Alright so it'll probably be easier to get feedback if I post here I would like some feedback on the prose of this fistfight I wrote. I only would like to know if the prose itself flows well, and if the fight is clear and easy to follow. Which parts are clunky and which are smooth, where it...