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Chapter 2, the visit Final draft 1/4/25 It was a regular night, in that fuzzy time that was not quite sundown but a bit after dinner. And because dinner wasn’t takeout there were things to do after dinner. Mum was cleaning the dishes, Green drying them beside her, perched on a step stool...

If there was any mercy in this abomination pseudo world it was that the childbearing his wife’s voice looked very little (precious little) like Grace. Age distanced them, though at this moment he seemed younger, time-reversed, and all that was his curse for the moment. But at that moment his...

Roost: a gift fic The Roombas had been the start of the madness. And much to his displeasure, it'd taken a full day to sort out. There'd been a small fleet of Roombas released into the Rocket compound. Some were set up with paintbrushes to spread stripes of color down halls, the more...

Some more chapters, sorry for the brevity but I'm doing this in bits and bobs as my times a bit scattered at the moment. Chapter 8 It’s curious to see Jir engaged in anything considering how passive he’s been thus far. It’s an interesting contrast…. I think autocorrect swapped some words here...

As promised, though a bit late (life's been exciting, let's leave it at that) Here's another offering to Obsession... Chapter 7: I found this an odd turn of phrase. “ I still had much to happen in my life.” Having something happen versus striving to make it happen, to do, even, really...

I'm not too sure what the formal term of this is called. But when a scene contrasts with the base genre of a piece... For example, a gag/laugh before the monster comes out in a horror piece, the peaceful moment before the action scenes kick in. It's that contrasting scene, where the moment...

I think the "she went out the window" line made me think of a cat/mon going out the window. At least that's how my tired brain interpreted the opening dialogue without context, once context was realized I realized my mistake but since I was rattling off a stream of consciousness sort of review...

looks like there are 4 to go. Congrats on your progress in the bingo and thanks for the timeline clarification! And are we opening up with a "slipped out the window kitty opening"? It feels like it? Continues reading. Ah, never mind a spell tag giver disappearance scene I guess? Anyway...

I'm here for the catnip, (rewinds that statement in my head a few times... meh, still works irony non-withstanding) I've read up to chapter three but decided to dig into part one for getting done on time's sake. Chapter one: At first, I expected the main human character to be a generic...

In response to your second story centering on Cyrus... It's an interesting nightmare opening, isn't it? He got everything he'd think he wanted but the reality of perfection aka perfect state being zero isn't something he was expecting or prepared to cope with. Even in dream forum... I'm...

As I am only familiar with game canon and Special canon I might ask some redundant things and make some redundant points. Regardless I wanted to be supportive so here I am. Initial response to summary/notes/comments: a redemptive non-au Cyrus? this I'm curious to see... And here we go, into...

Ran through Grammarly 5.10.2021 sentence smoothing 5.14.2021 Giovanni was of the mentality that it was better to leave idiots to be idiots. Hau babbling on about looking for a yard had proved beyond a shadow of a doubt that the boy had no sense in his head. Having scouted out the place via a...

AN: Ran through Grammarly on 5.8.21 Sentence rehaul 5.9.2021 TW: HUNTING GORE POACHING They’d hiked a path, from the killing box to the campsite. Binding what ‘mon they encountered on the way. Even without the shrine, and legends, the pool was an obvious echo of Celebi’s clearing, and...

You have my condolances for having that level of idioc to work under, even temperarily. This did feel like a sharing peice and I wondered. Knowing that for sure well I'll keep that in mind as I continue to read and review. Thanks for clearing that line up. I did a few rereads and was still...

I look forward to it!

And done, here are chapters 1-5. If no one replies to the review tag in a week or so I'll post up 6-10 to get it moving along but until then just think of this as the start of a whole story thank-you review. It's just going to come along in bits and bobs. The analysis: I actually bumped into...

Hmm, while I have some stuff in my old for my most recent I'd say I have a tie for my work "Two paths" In the first scene, Pallet's under the effects of a mysterious psychic attack and Ash managed to get home and he's ripping it apart looking for his mother... the results are not what he...

Meh, the game's been in lock-mode for a while so it's an understandable mistake to make. I actually PMed Bosscar to make sure they were still present on the site and asked if it was OK to read/review their work. I got a green light to tackle a later chapter on the ao3 site. So here is its...

Am presently running everything through Grammarly and trying to do some by-hand editing for clarity with Transversal (chapters 1-3 done with Grammarly, the other restructuring/sentence work is taking more time) the other chapters and works are of course pending. As for new content, I've got...

Hi, courtesy of catnip I come baring a review. (or 2) I've done the uncensored prologue (as a horror fan I found the reading quite fun, and while I understand the necessity of offering a softer version for those curious but sensitive I liked the more detailed one more) and chapter one. the...