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Reviewed one chapter of The Legendarian Chronicles. +1 593 words +1 theme (previously reviewed 33 chapters on the Serebii.net forums)

Reviewed chapter 34 of The Legendarian Chronicles.

I have arrived, to review... chapter 34, the first chapter I didn't properly review yet! Hoooopefully this is the start of me catching up on reviewing this on TR. The repetition of "It wasn't supposed to be this soon" feels awkward, possibly accidental? Technically it sounds like she's quoting...

Reviewed one chapter of The End: Rekindled. +1 810 words +1 theme

Reviewed one chapter of The End: Rekindled.

Back for chapter two! Snubbull has two l's. I enjoy this worldbuilding flavor - both showing the level of technology they have and, as Cleo points out, it's a quickly-assembled temporary town. Repetition of "supplies" feels a little awkward here to me. More good characterization - this...

A review for the new version of chapter one of Pokémon: Legendary Adventures. +1 2517 words (not all of them are about the new version specifically, but enough are, haha) +1 theme

Reviewed one chapter of Pokémon: Legendary Adventures.

As in, the thing where long quotes get cut off at a certain length and you have to click to view the full quote. I think I've gotten the impression that's the thing that's glitching out when this happens. I could be wrong, though.

Back for the revised chapter one! I'll turn some closer scrutiny on it this time around, so there are some things I comment on that were in the old chapter but I didn't mention last time because you'd mentioned less feedback on chapter one. Still got plenty to say about everything that's new...

"Abigail said that she had information from the Vaporeon's memories but it didn't really help because it just corroborated something we already know, so she shouldn't say what it is because it'd give a hint about what she can do."

This game was annoying, Mia decided. It had sounded fun, but in practice it was just her having to repeat herself over and over trying to explain basic logic to people who were stupid. Palkia too? Palkia was supposed to be smart. She didn't understand why any of these people couldn't understand...

It was annoying that there wasn't a better choice. If it wasn't Darkwhite, there wasn't much reason to suspect anyone else, and no real time to figure out who else would be a good candidate. "...Skip," Mia said.

"I'm withdrawing my vote too," said Mia abruptly after a long while lost in thought. "I think she can prove her power."

"His evidence doesn't mean anything unless Squirt knew who killed him," Mia said, yet again. Why did only Palkia get it? Palkia made sense. She liked Palkia. "If I said what my gift was it'd become useless. So I'm not going to." As for Darkwhite... Mia was good at telling when people were...

Nobody here made any sense. Mia wished Dave was there. "It isn't a lead when it's based on false premises. It's good to say something is wrong when it's wrong."

Mia fixed Darkwhite with a hard stare. "If you didn't want your powerful power to be known immediately, you could have just not said anything about it. Why did you really tell everyone?"

"And even if Darkwhite didn't kill Squirt, that doesn't mean she's not one of the killers. It just means she's not the one who killed him."

Mia frowned in annoyance. "Why is everyone acting like Lee cleared anyone? I already explained probably Squirt doesn't even know who killed him. I didn't say Lee's lying. I said it doesn't mean anything."

Mia watched and listened. The dating games weren't turning up much useful information so far. But... "Palkia's right. Darkwhite is suspicious." She narrowed her eyes at the Mew-like creature. "My ability isn't weird like the ones she listed either. So the ones she claims she has don't fit with...