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Artwork by @Dragonfree Chapter 11: Defeated Wes stared at the scene before him, at an utter loss for words. The kitchen had transformed from the previous night; the table had been scooted to the very center of the floor, with a second, foldable one set up and pushed against one end to make a...

Chapter 10: Victims and Warriors Wes had been in a plethora of uncomfortable situations within the last few days, but this one might have been the worst of them all. Duking had introduced him and Rui to his two children just outside his home before sending the kids back inside with Wes in tow...

Hello again!! Always a pleasure to see your reviews! :D Now, this is why I enjoy your reviews so much - you pick up on the most subtle things thst most of my readers don’t! I won’t spoil anything here, but I will say that you are absolutely right to be a little skeptical of all these things...

OH BOY A NEW CHAPTER HERE WE GO this is just a nitpick, really: it should be “Yes, one that my friend, a hydreigon, told me.” Oh, ouch. This is N’s struggle in a nutshell here; he has a voice, he can hear what others can’t, but he struggles to know how to make people listen. He is...

Chapter 9: The Deal Wes froze. Panic flared inside his chest at the mention of his Snagger name. No one, no one outside of Snagem knew him as Leo. So how...? He willed himself to stay calm, to not let his shock show, but his mind was racing. How did this man know? How did he know...

I’m so happy you came back for another review! I don’t plan on doing a ton of Pokémon POV, but it will pop up occasionally throughout the story, mostly to provide more characterization for the Pokémon, especially the shadows. Ah! This made me so happy, lol. I’m so glad you’re liking the...

Chapter 8: City of Rust "D-do you always drive that fast?" It was the first thing she'd said to him all morning - well, afternoon, by this point. They were several hours into their trek to Pyrite, and they still had a ways to go; Wes had only stopped for a brief moment to allow them to...

It’s long overdue for me to share my thoughts on this fic! To be honest, I don’t consider myself a professional by any means, and I don’t really feel qualified to give constructive criticism, especially for a story that is already so MARVELOUSLY written. But I’m happy to share what specific...

Hello! Sorry it’s been a minute since getting back to your review! I just wanted to let you know that I took your advice and edited the first couple chapters. You had a good point on not withholding Wes’ name for so long - to be honest, I wasn’t even sure of it when I was writing it, lol. So I...

Chapter 7: Noctis Mortem The crumbling old house left much to be desired in terms of comfort, but Wes supposed it was better than nothing. They'd made it to the ruins of a tiny old town about two hours northwest of Phenac. Night had officially settled over the desert, and the winds brought a...

Aaaaah another amazing review!! I’ve read this like 5 times, it makes me so happy lol I originally included this scene to introduce Willie’s character, as this is not the last we will be seeing of him - but I realize now that I definitely could have trimmed down the few paragraphs about the...

Thank you so much for your review!! I absolutely understand not enjoying retellings - for the most part, they don’t actually do it for me either! While the early chapters of this story are very faithful to the game, things diverge quite a bit from the source material starting in the next...

Chapter 6: Lockdown This is definitely not how I thought today would go. Rui said these words to herself as she sat beside a grumbling Wes in the Phenac clinic. Their visit had taken roughly two hours from start to finish, much to the Trainer’s chagrin. He was in quite a sour mood, although...

Chapter 5: Stirring Shadows Wes couldn’t help but grumble a little once Phenac City came into view. Yesterday he had hoped to never have to lay eyes on this city again, and yet here he was, shielding his eyes from its brightness even with his shaded goggles on. He parked in his usual place...

Chapter 4: Questions Rui wasn't entirely sure this wasn't all just some sort of fever dream. In the span of just over a day, she'd seen a crazed Pokémon, been kidnapped, had nearly suffocated in a sack, was rescued by someone who acted for all the world as though he'd rather have left her...

Please pardon me while I’m doing a happy dance over here at your review! Seriously - thank you!! I love in depth reviews SO much! Your advice is super helpful, too, and I’ll need to make some edits to the chapter! I do have a tendency to repeat words without realizing it, so thanks for bringing...

Chapter 3: Change of Plans Sunlight streamed down on the whitewashed streets and sparkling fountains, and there was no respite from the blinding brightness and burning heat as Wes and his Pokémon walked with Rui to the mayor's home. The girl certainly noticed this, as she commented for what...

Chapter 2: Interference Wes was awakened the following morning by the sound of footsteps and chatter from the diner overhead. He sat up, stretched, and was slowly gathering his bearings when a familiar smell wafted to his nose... Bacon. He groaned. "Aw, hell—" "ESPI!" He was pushed flat on...