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Ah, and here we go, another little interlude chapter. I think these have been generally good for the flow of the story, and compared to the opening chapters, I think these were paced a lot better in terms of being able to follow everything and actually getting a good feel for the characters, to...

Chapter 13 – A Place to Call Home Traversing Fae, Fae Forest was a calming experience, for the most part. The wild Pokémon were no match for Amia’s flames, and Owen managed to take on a few as well. He used the aggressors as practice for his vines. He had learned a new technique this way...

Ahaha... I think you accidentally spoiled it in-narrative before Jade would have known. -- Okay! So, this was a nice chapter. I liked where you went with it, and as usual, the action was spliced in with development. Obviously the most interesting segment was the part with Mewtwo, and how...

OH COME ON! -- Anyway, that aside, this is an interesting chapter that covers a few story beats in rapid succession. I'll go over those later, but I don't have anything particularly remarkable to comment on other than the fact that this is the first time we see Chibi in a truly vulnerable...

Chapter 12 - Twisted Minds Anam, and only Anam, heard the deep boom of metal bells. The Abandoned Temple—the original name lost to the ages—stood four stories high, despite only having a single story inside. The building was made out of marble with intricate designs along the walls in the...

I'm glad you like him! He's definitely a fun one to read about, so I hope you enjoy his appearances. Hard to follow, huh? Yeah, it was definitely an explosive opening. Maybe I could look into clarifying the opening a little, though it's definitely hard to judge since you're unfamiliar with...

Good progress chapter! You didn't dabble too long with the training this time, either. I think you had a good balance of that, and a bit of world building for how Protect works in this world. That's pretty clever, though thirty seconds, oh boy. I wonder how fast-paced battles go if that's...

Finally, some payoff! Took a while, but this chapter was well worth it, I'd say. We've already got the sabotage mission to thwart Raikou, and I have some overall thoughts about this at the end, but my initial impression of this chapter was a nice little good-job on getting this little arc...

Gonna use this quote to zero in on the fact that this battle gave me serious flashback vibes to literally the chapter before. We had a fight scene opening that one and a fight scene opening this one and aaaa it's just a repeat and it was hard for me to not skim over it. Yeah, they're getting...

Special Episode 1 – Storm Lightning shattered the sky. A squadron of Pokémon consisting of a Flareon, Delphox, Salazzle, and Rapidash stopped to avert their eyes. A thunderous blast deafened them, and the ground trembled when a follow-up explosion—this time, one of a tree crashing down—dwarfed...

Understandable. Sorry that my upload rate is a bit on the fast side. I've slowed down for your sake and other readers, but I can't possibly slow down more than how I'm publishing on FFN for current chapters, so--once every two weeks is the slowest I can go. Hopefully it's still possible to catch...

"This is starting to get a little serious!" Namo took a worried step back, but his Pokemon--aside from Hecto--stood in front, ready for the final stand. "Focus, author," Hecto warned. "Your powers are clearly doing something to help them, just like all the other fallers. It's about time you do...

So, I feel that the first scene went on for a bit longer than it probably needed to. We’ve kinda already seen fights going on, y’know? But that might just be my bias against repeats of mook fights/training montages. Definitely in favor of summarizing or having them happen offscreen at this...

Throughout the entire trip and breaks and all the training, Namo did barely a thing besides send basic commands. No, he was too busy staring at his phone, and Hecto began to wonder if this was the usual trend when he lived his normal life, too. Hecto stared at Namo, sparing a few glances at his...

Chapter 11 – Moving In Kricketot chirped in the bushes. No moon filled the sky, but tiny white pinpricks, painted on the sky, took its place. Amia, with Alex beside her, led the way home with Owen and Zena. There was a little spring in the Gardevoir’s step. Owen’s tail and his Magmortar...

Why was being polite such a struggle? Still, he knew he had to get things done. So while Sophocles spoke, Namo found his eyes quietly drifting down to his phone; he was so absorbed in explaining himself that he probably didn't even realize that nobody had his attention anymore. Even Hecto's...

Hiya Umbra! I regret not picking up this work sooner. In any case, here's my stuff. Pick a chapter, any chapter -- I hope it can get you interested enough to keep reading in the future! Hands of Creation

I regret not reading this sooner. The zany humor of gods going on vacation is literally right up my alley, and I can't wait to see where this is going to take me, since I don't think it's going to quite be your simple vacation~ But first, I'm just going to take some time to read the opening...

Chapter 10 – The Hunters’ Mission “But… but Rhys is cool.” The Charmeleon had stopped walking the moment Zena told him that Rhys was a Hunter. It simply didn’t make sense. No… no, it did. It added up. But it didn’t make sense to Owen anyway. Rhys was too noble. He was an Elite Heart. How could...

Jade, you gotta study up a bit more on basic attacks. If the Chinese can learn over 1000 characters as the basics of their language, surely you can learn a couple hundred common techniques! -- Alright, so full disclosure: I liked this chapter a lot more than the previous one, mostly because...