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Pokémon Zero the Hero - A Pokémon Mystery Dungeon story

Chapter 18

Gyeig

Junior Trainer
Pronouns
he/him
Partners
  1. samurott

Chapter 18 - Estranged and Astray​


After having to swallow a bitter pill courtesy of the parents, George and Blitzer resigned themselves to their room. All that was missing was a whimper. Instead of spending the day outside with the others, or going out exploring, here they were stuck to the confines of the hovel. Given the tone of the conversation just now, George found it a struggle to believe they even had that liberty left. Maybe they could be loud with their toys if they were lucky. All to shelter and protect them from the green storm. He sighed.

“So, that happened.”

“It sure did,” Blitzer said before blowing on the paper spinner. It spun around much as it did a few days ago, much like it did on the day he first got it. And there was a strong chance that it would spin in the same way when he was ready to put it away for good. Blitzer didn’t chuckle, or smile, or so much as move for that matter. He just sat near his toy box, one arm slumped, tail curled around his side, messing around with the spinner. Neither he or George said anything. Blitzer only blew on the spinner, and George only watched and listened to the spinner being blown around, until the tedium became too much.

“Do you have any other toys?”

“Of course I do. Do you want one?”

“Yeah. It’s not like there’s much else for me to do in here, is there?”

Blitzer reached in the basket with his free claw, then tossed two objects over to the other side of the room; they landed halfway across and slid the remainder of the distance towards George, who picked them up with a bored groan. The objects were a wooden paddle covered in a red cloth, and a tiny marble ball made out of a soft metal. George hummed a dull note.

‘Well, this is familiar, at least. It’s not a complicated game, is it? Makes sense that they would have it here too.’

For a while, George kept to himself trying to keep the ball in the air, the thump of it hitting the paddle intermingling with the sound of Blitzer blowing away at the spinner. The expression on his face remained ever so dull, and Blitzer wasn’t faring much better. Sometimes he landed it, other times it rolled away, but that was it. There wasn’t much to it. Just like the spinner. Just like the other toys. A seven year old would have been content for ages, but George had a year or five over that. It wasn’t long before he put the paddle beside him, leaned over back, and began drumming his hands on his belly, trying to recreate the beats to some tunes he’d heard on the television back home. But that wasn’t much better.

‘I wish I had a television to watch right now. Even if it’s just one hour. I could learn a thing or two…’

A blue wave crashed over George’s head. Out of the ocean, into the river, some might say. Except that an actual river sounded wonderful at a time where he was stuck in a dusky cave. His body sure craved jumping into one, in any case. What else was there to do, except talk about the Soldiers again? The Pokemon that had gotten him stuck here to begin with? He and Blitzer weren’t in any mood to be discussing that further. No surprises to be had there. Was there any alternative though, except for sitting around here waiting for the day to turn to night, and then for the night to turn bright?

Simple answer, there wasn’t. Messing around with a ball and paddle lost its appeal already, and that box wasn’t bound to contain anything much better. Once the thought of discussing the situation at hand crossed his mind, it stayed there. What was happening? Thieves were supposedly running amok, but were they? Or was there more to it? There had to be: George was sure of it. He looked over to his straw bed, which the flute piece they’d found a few days ago was still buried in, jutting out of the straws slightly on a side facing the wall. It was hidden, yet easy to take out, in case that was ever needed. A nagging feeling tingled in George’s head that the flute piece wasn’t merely something neat and shiny looking. The idea clicked too well.

“So… are you doing alright, at least?”

Blitzer sat slumped over with his knees up, one arm leaning against a leg while propping up his head. “No.”

George’s eyes were drawn to the ground. “Yeah…”

“Why do they always have to keep me in here when there’s trouble…” Blitzer let the spinner drop out of his hand, right back into the toy box.

“Maybe they’re just worried and they’ll let us back out,” said George. He assumed the best from Nero and Nera. They were good people, at the end of the day. Even if Nero was easy to upset and Nera’s nagging got annoying, they meant well. More than he could say for all other adults he met prior to that. Blitzer had a different set of eyes viewing the situation, however..

“No they won’t. They never do.”

“Have you tried asking them?”

“More times than you can imagine. I’m telling you, George, once they’re all scaredy like they are now, there’s no point in even bothering.” Blitzer grumbled through bared teeth; for a second, George thought he heard a sharper, more animal-like growl in there, and felt his muscles tense up. “I’m getting tired of them walking all over my life like that. Darn soldiers. I’ll show them what I’m made of if I have to! Just because everyone here rolls over doesn’t mean I will.”

George’s ears went down; his tail impatiently slapped the ground he was sitting on. “Uh, what do you mean, roll over?” ‘Wasn’t it you who said no one is strong enough to stand up to them?’

“Everyone here just gives up when they see soldiers. Like today. Oh, they want us to look out for thieves now. I guess we will have to give most of our food again sometime soon. Everyone hates Soldiers, yet no one does anything.”’ Blitzer fell over backwards against the wall. He had a look of defeat on his face.

“I know they’re supposed to be strong, I’ve seen it myself! And I know my parents are scared of me getting seriously hurt because I like trying to be hero! But someone has to do something.”

George’s eyes were drawn to Blitzer’s side. His back still wasn’t looking particularly flexible. “Can you really blame them, though? After how badly beat up you came back a few days ago? We didn’t even tell them half of what we had gotten up to, yet they’re already frightened. It could have been much worse.”

“I know, George,” Blitzer muttered, his eyes half closed as he eyed the ground under his feet. George put the tips of his fingers against one another, and breathed in.

“Truth to be told, I’m glad you have parents like them. They’re incredibly harsh, yes, but it comes from a good place.”

“What do you mean?” Blitzer asked.

“All I’ve ever known was the former. You might take it for granted, but… living without others looking out for you, or worrying about you, or wishing the best for you? It hurts. It really does.” George blew his breath out through his nose, deflating the tension in his belly. Blitzer wouldn’t look him in the eye; a frown was visible, even on just the corner of his mouth.

“Yeah. I… I understand you. I guess I’m still lucky in a way. But sometimes, I get the feeling that they’re too afraid to do things that will really help us out. Just look at the Soldiers! They’re getting worse every day!” Blitzer said, as he proceeded to wave his claws around in wild gestures. “First they demand we accept them, then they impose more and more rules on us, and now they’re taking our food. What is going to happen next? Are they going to start taking Pokemon out of their homes, because they suspect something? Someone has to stand up them, George!”

“But what about that one in the square just now? How is anyone supposed to stand up to that?”

Blitzer almost choked on his breath as he spat it out. “Egh, I don’t know. But someone has to do something! Even if it doesn’t turn out well! They’ve already taken half of our food, what comes next?”

George sighed. “You know the answer to that better than I do.”

“Take the rest of our food. Take innocent Pokemon away,” Blitzer said, staring off at the wall opposite to George bearing a wincing expression on his face, as if he had just stepped on one of his toys by accident.

“I was more thinking about the shark,” George said.

“...Shark?” Blitzer replied. George pressed one of his hands against his face. ‘Stupid me.’

“That monster from the square, I mean. With the teeth, the scythe arms… the star on its head. It looked like it would eat you and me for breakfast, and that’s just one of them!”

“Yeah,” Blitzer said, now shivering. “To be honest, I never knew a Pokemon like that existed! It’s like a Scyther, crossed with a Sharpedo, and then a Salamence, too! If that’s the kind of Soldiers that are out there, then it’s no surprise no one is willing to stand up. But…”

George’s hands were firmly wrapped around his scalchop. Fiddling with the tool he had yet to find a use for, he watched as Blitzer was caught up in a struggle. One side wanted to make a stand, the other wanted him to get inside and stop trying to scare off rain. The hero inside clashed against the little body Blitzer was stuck in. Maybe if he had his wings, he’d stand a chance. Sharper claws, hotter flames, that fearsome Charizard roar. George couldn’t help but admire the idea of standing beside one as a companion. Maybe he and Blitzer would have a chance if they were fully evolved. If it wasn’t already futile though, what with them being all alone and up against the whole world. The whole town. The whole building, even.

“...I just hope we can actually live one day. Not just be stuck here, slowly losing everything.”

George nodded. “Don’t get me wrong, I understand you. But we’re just kids. We almost died over a flute the other day.” Blitzer groaned to these words, tepidly admitting George was right with a nod. George steeled his nerves; now was the time to bring it up. “Speaking of that flute, aren’t you getting a bad feeling thinking about it too? I mean, we got it a few days ago, and the first thing we hear from the Soldiers is that they’re looking for something stolen.”

Blitzer shook his head. “I don’t know. Maybe it is, it wouldn’t surprise me. What do you think they’ll do once they find out we have it?”

George drew an exasperated breath. “I wish I knew the answer myself.”

A loud bang broke through the door. The two children jumped off the ground while sitting, their frowns turning to grimaces in an instant as the door swung open. Nero hopped in.
“Lads, Speedy wants to see you.”

Blitzer and George scratched their heads. “Uhh, what?”

“You heard me,” said Nero with a flick of his ears. “Speedy is at the front door. Your mother and I just got done talking with him. Best to not keeping him waiting.”

“But weren’t we supposed to stay here?” George asked with a thump of his tail. Nero rolled his eyes.

“Turns out one of ‘em came running back, gave some huge apology for taking all our food two weeks ago. Don’t know what that’s all about, but I’m guessin’ it’ll be fine letting you out for now. While Speedy is watching you, that is.”

“Awesome!” Blitzer held up a clenched fist, his tail excitedly swinging around as his mind wandered off to thoughts of adventure. Of course, Nero could see straight through him. If George could, Blitzer’s father sure could do it too.

“Wouldn’t get too excited if I were you. Only reason we’re lettin’ you out now is because Speedy’s there to make sure you don’t run off. I’m not tolerating you coming back like you did three days ago, mister.”

“Oh.” Blitzer’s excitement quickly faded. George stuck his tongue into one of his freckled cheeks. ‘So much for adventure.’

* * *​

“And remember, don’t lose sight of them! They’ll be halfway across the world before you know it.”

“Don’t worry, Nera. Got my own kid who’s the same way, remember?”

‘Of course! I hope little Junior’s doing well!“

“He sure is! Gets along with your kids just fine. Have a good day!”

A few paw waves later, the door closed. The three began to walk down the hill into the village proper. Or so anyone would think looking at them. Just a few steps further, barely out of hearing range for someone standing on the other end of the doro, Speedy went from humming a tune to stretching his arms and lightning bolt tail out in an exaggerated manner. “Aaargh, feels good to be outdoors, don’t it?”

“Sure does,” Blitzer said with a smile and a sway of his tail. “So what happened? Why are my parents suddenly not all stuck up?”

The Raichu burst into a chuckle. “Should’ve stuck ‘round in the square after the Sharpedo-face left. Previous nutter in charge of that whole lot came running back into the square. Gave this big teary eyed apology for taking all our food away. ‘Ooooh, I’m so sorry! Never thought it would bring you aaal so much paaaain!’” he said, mimicking the speech with a high pitched wail only a clown was capable of. The two children laughed, and Speedy caught the laughter too after a while.

“Best part, he made ‘imself sound so genuine. As if he actually cares, hah! Hindsight, it sucks I put Junior back indoors, would’ve been funny to see his reaction to it!”

“Heh, where is Junior, actually?” George struggled to get the words out of his throat without breaking into another chuckle.

Junior shrugged. “With the other kids, probably. If their parents let ‘em back out. Sure hope so. But before you go runnin’ off, mind listening to what I have to say? Got a favor to ask you two, and yes, you two in particular.”

George raised an eye, while Blitzer gave a curious flick of his tail. “...Why us?”

Speedy waved a finger in front of the Oshawott’s face. “‘Cause you and he are the only two in this village stubborn enough to do it. Especially after that little stint in the cave a few days ago. I need some good help real bad, you hear?”

Blitzer folded his arms. “But we’re just kids. How could we help you?”

Speedy nodded. “Look, I know this’ll be weird and all, but I got myself into quite the pickle, alright. Some thieves broke into my house last night, you hear? Made off with an important little heirloom of mine, and I want it back.”

“y-You want us to go after thieves for you?” Blitzer asked, almost choking on his words.

“Well, yeah, but you wont be doing it for me. You’ll be doing it with me.”

A bad chill went down George’s spine. How many times has he gone down this path in the past few weeks? Sure, he’s gotten tougher, but with what happened in Little Rock still fresh on the mind, going on another quest out to the middle of nowhere was beyond foolish. Even Blitzer was having doubts about the idea.

“But we’re just kids, what can we do against adult Pokemon? Feral Pokemon are awful enough for us.” Blitzer stretched his back, tail jittering back and forth all the while. The scratches might’ve been gone on the outside, but Blitzer could feel beyond the skin, and the mark of that pedestal couldn’t have fully healed. Not this fast.

“Hah, say it with a little less emotion, and you’re startin’ to sound like Junior! That’s where I come in, lad.” Speedy nodded his head; something about the motion of his head felt off. It looked more like a Magnezone nod than anything a Raichu would do. “I know who the thief is, and I know how to get ‘em. I just need to make sure we won’t be in there alone.”

“Wait, what do you mean you know who the thief is?” asked George.

“Got a little… history with ‘em, lad. Some old drama, nothing to worry about.”

Every second, George felt a little extra concern about this whole plan. Nothing about it seemed right. Shadier than what goes on in the back of Hein’s cafe, and intentionally vague. He shook his head. Speedy was one terrible, terrible liar. If he was human, his cheeks would’ve been redder and hotter than a Charizard’s breath. He knew it, and by the looks of it, Blitzer did too. Usually he would be the one jumping and cheering at the idea of getting to do something heroic for someone else. Today though, all he had to give were folded arms and whip-like flicks of his tail. Finding the excitement in him now was like looking for a diamond in a haystack.

Still, George wasn’t willing to rebuke Speedy, either. Whether it was a longing to not be stuck inside the hovel all day, or that stubborn wanderlust inside of him speaking its mind, or something else, he wasn’t willing to call out the lie for what it was. Blitzer, however, didn’t appear to be so tame.

“Alright, I don’t fully believe you, okay? You’re acting all weird, Speedy. It’s not like you to keep things from me.”

A mist of saliva flew out of Speedy’s mouth as his teeth bit down on each other. “Trust me, kids, t’is a bunch of old drama that’ll take a long time to explain. Blitzer, you know I don’t lie to you. Most of this town wouldn’t have cared about steppin’ on your toes, but I do. Alright?”

The Raichu gave the two children a smirk and wide eyes, kind of like a small Pikachu would. The weight he’d put on since evolving and his sharp ears weren’t doing him any favors. George bit his lip and pulled it into his mouth slightly, making himself look like an elderly dwarf. He felt awkward.

Blitzer hummed a curious note, then clicked his tongue a few times. “Well yeah, you’re right. Are you sure that we can do this? I hurt my back pretty bad, and I’m not sure I could handle getting hurt that badly again.”

Smiling, Speedy nodded energetically. “Of course! I know what we’re doing. And it’s not as if we’ll be helpless, either. Those thieves are hidin’ right in Agate Township, just in plain sight! If something goes wrong, we’ll have plenty of help all around us in no time.”

Blitzer kept his tail close by as he thought the request through. George stood beside him, hands clasped together, hoping Blitzer wouldn’t say yes so easily. Another journey into the dark was not what either of them needed. Not with Blitzer’s back, not with the Soldiers roaming around, not with the parents ready to ground them for a whole month if things went awry. Difficult as it was to admit, perhaps dropping the heroism might do them some good. They weren’t fit to weather the storm just yet.

Alas, Blitzer has other ideas. From the moment he sighed in a high pitched tone, George knew he was in for a disappointment. “Alright. I’m willing to give it a try. As long as you can keep us from getting into too much danger, I’ll be fine with it,” he said. While he was drawing in a breath, George crossed his arms.

‘Argh, not now, Blitzer! What if they find out?’

“And also, could you keep this a secret from my parents?” Blitzer continued, now holding his tail in his hands. “They’re already on edge from me getting hurt. I don’t want to disappoint them again.”

Speedy patted the Charmander on both his shoulders: One with a paw, the other with his tail. “No worries, lad. You know I’ve got your back. What do you say? Have we got a deal?”

Blitzer nodded back with a frown. “Deal.”

“Awesome. And you there, Oshawott lad, what about you?” asked Speedy, staring on hopeful. George sighed back.

“As long as we don’t get into trouble.”

“ I’ll tell your parents that I had you help me around the home for a while. Then they’ll blame me at least, heheh,” Speedy said, grinning. “Anyway lads, If we’re all in agreement, then I’ll be back tomorrow morning to get you two. Agate Township ain’t so far away, ‘s a little shy of hour’s walk I’m pretty sure. See you around.”

With that, Speedy turned tail and walked down the hill, occasionally turning backwards to wave a paw through the air. After he vanished out of sight, and all three of them were done waving at each other, George jump turned towards Blitzer, resisting the urge to grab him by the shoulders and shake him around.

“What are you doing?! You just said it yourself, we can’t go out right now! Your parents would lock us up and throw away the key!”

Blitzer looked away in shame, faintly in the direction of the village square and the main entrance, which were hidden behind rain soaked homes. “Yes, I know that, but,” he paused to sigh. George wasn’t having any of it. Already he could hear Nero barking at them to not set one foot out of the house for a whole week. “It’s Speedy. I can’t just say no to him.”

“Why though?” George asked with a slap of his tail. Blitzer grabbed onto his tail and looked down at the Scalchop on his chest, which was as clean as a whistle.

“He’s been there for me all these years. Even when my parents were starting to get sick of me, he’d still take my side. It’s done him no good, yet he never changed. After all that, I cant let him down.”

“But you know what your dad said. How are we going to talk our way out of this one if he finds out?”

“I know that. And believe me, I feel horrible having to disappoint him and my mom again. Because I do get jumpy and run off, they’re totally right,” Blitzer explained, his hands and tail doing half the talking for him. “But Speedy is someone I can trust. He sure got me out of the weeds more times than I can remember. Like one time with the Drilbur, he jumped right in to help me out, even though he has his own fear of earthlings to deal with. If there’s anyone in this village that we can trust with something like this, it’s him.”

George’s eyes were drawn away to a house on a distant hill. Lance’s house, most likely, though the Druddigon was nowhere to be seen. Anything to pull his attention away from the current situation was welcome in his book. Talking to Blitzer was like talking to a wall sometimes. Argue all you like, you’re always ending up eating your own words. Sometimes, it seemed like divine intervention from Arceus was the only thing capable of changing Blitzer’s mind. George shook his head, and accepted defeat.

“You better not be making jokes here, Blitzer…”

“Of course not.” Blitzer put his hands on George’s shoulders, squeezing them tight. “I would never joke about something like this! Ever!” he said. George replied with a tepid nod. ‘God, I sure hope so. If I can’t trust you, then who in this world can I?;

’”We’ll be fine, George. If you don’t trust Speedy, then trust me. Agate Township isn’t so far away. My parents and I have been there before. This is no Mystery Dungeon we’re tackling, alright? They might be thieves, but they’re still sane Pokemon,” Blitzer said. “Think of it like a good training opportunity, instead of a fight to survive.”

The hands on George’s shoulders squeezed harder; a groan came out of his throat. “Civilized, like Soldiers, you mean.”

Blitzer clicked his tongue. “Even Soldiers have standards. Ferals don’t. One pushes you around, the other one tries to eat you alive.”

George gulped. “e-Eaten alive?!”

“What do you think those Drilbur wanted to do to us? You saw them, right? Those eyes, and those claws? They one hundred percent thought you looked tasty, George.”

Blitzer took his hands back; he felt them trembling. “That’s enough,” George whimpered. ‘No more, please. I like getting some sleep.’ Life was a lot more manageable without knowing you’re one bad encounter away from being viciously mauled and devoured. Alas, that was a fact of life George couldn’t stay ignorant of.

“Sure, sure. What do you say, are you ready to go to Agate Township tomorrow?”

George let go of a shaky breath. “I’m not getting any more ready than this, I feel.” ’Not without anyone telling me what Agate Township or Pokemon thieves are like, anyway.’

Blitzer nodded; a smile appeared on his Charmander snout, which looked like it had grown a little over the past few days. “Great! I’ll tell you more about it tomorrow.”
 
Chapter 19

Gyeig

Junior Trainer
Pronouns
he/him
Partners
  1. samurott

Chapter 19 - Forced March​


The sun shone past clouds onto the grassy fields of the Agate Province. Picturesque, one could say: The bright emerald of the fields were a sight to behold to any pair of eyes. Even the ones Gareda glared with. Despite being on official business in the name of the Vined Crown herself, even she couldn’t keep up that vicious appearance as she and the soldiers under her talons marched through the fields. Bright as it may be, the world always keeps spinning. No one grows weak at the sight of a field.

From first light onwards, Gareda and her soldiers had been hard at work, going from town to town across the Agate region to deliver a quick speech. Thieves were on the loose with a piece of the Azure Flute, and the cooperation of the populace was needed to find it. Simple words proclaiming a common interest, yet nothing more than a nod of acknowledgement at best. So far, that’s what the story had been in every wretched little burg she and her Soldiers encountered. One big waste of time, whose chances of delivering any nugget of valuable information were shrinking by the minute. It seemed like new wrinkles were developing underneath her blue scales after every speech.

The lone star in the daylight was a single encounter. One small and forgettable town by the name of ‘Greenfield’, if the faded out sign at the front was speaking the truth. While giving the same spiel about thieves and cooperation, her sensory organs went wild. Throbbing, aching, screaming without a mouth. Something wasn’t right in that town. On one side, the residents of this village in particular seemed downright furious when she and the Soldiers at her back entered their village. A mixture of fear and anger hung in the air. It was the kind of anger only hatred could fuel. No simple hamlet that reeked of moss and old wood got there with fights over the harvest.

But that wasn’t all. Her sensors might have been alerted by the fury of a whole village, but they went into a frenzy over something in particular. Even now, some miles removed from that village, they were still ringing slightly. To her immediate left, they were keen on the sight of a child and his friend. One little sea otter with a freckled face, so weary on his feet that a strong wind would send him flying, and her sensors panicked. Why would that be? Her sensors had never let her down before. And despite the sights, and despite far greater burdens resting on her shoulders, the thoughts didn’t go away. A droning, nauseous feeling crept up in her head; she raised an arm into the sky.

“We’re taking a break. Now.” ‘Before I lose my mind. It’s only a damned kid, Gareda. Get over yourself.’

Like clockwork, the Soldiers broke out of their formation and scattered across the area. They were like old Pokemon limping their way through a scorching desert, yearning for any drops of freedom they could find. Frolicking over the plains, tugging on their cloth bands or tossing said band off all together, or just plain dropping onto the grass and flailing their limbs around. The Toucannon and Magmar who had been assigned to ‘watch over’ Gareda were among them. One flew off to sip from a pond, the other flopped onto her belly like half the others.

‘Just what I expected. It’s always this way when I have to take over. Complete and utter disarray.’

Gareda sighed. She remained on the road, watching over the plains and forests behind her. Rolling over wet grass wouldn’t bode well with the throbbing feeling in her head. The day was bright, the birds were chirping, the grass was fresh and dewey: Couldn’t have been a worse moment to feel sick. Whatever truly tugged on her sensors back in that village, they sure had done their worst. They were strong. Far too strong. Not to mention the hatred in that village’s heart. It was worth investigating, at the very least.

Alas, her fortunes wouldn't brighten up any time soon. Others had to trample all over her garden, even when it had been ruined enough as was. The latest joker appeared in front of her while she was resting: A Shiftry with overgrown leaf hands and a coat in dire need of a trim appeared besides her. It didn’t take long for a frown to regrow on Gareda’s face.

“Lord Gareda, why have we stopped?”

The Shiftry spoke in a pompous matter, as if it was the one calling the shots. In Gareda’s column. That was a mistake no self respecting commander could ever tolerate. Gareda swayed her whole body around in a rapid motion; the Shiftry jumped back as Gareda’s tail nearly smacked it across the chest. “Why don’t we start back at the beginning? First you will explain who you are, then you will tell me why you are asking that utterly asinine question of yours.”

“Uhh…” the Shiftry grumbled and stuttered, covering up its chest with one arm while sticking the other out at the forest off to the side. Camouflage was going to do him little good here. “m-My name is Birch, my lord. Colonel Birch. I was in charge of operations around these parts before you came along.”

Gareda’s frown grew deeper. Her head slowly sank towards Birch’s long nose, and it moved further back the closer she came. The exact response she wanted to see. ‘Birch? I can think of a better name for you, chump…’ The smirk went off Birch’s face. A grunt later, Gareda continued. “I see. Now then, answer me. Why are you asking that question?”

Birch audibly gulped. Gareda’s sensors were pleased. “w-Well, Agate Township is not far, and that is our final destination. Why not… march what’s left? There is plenty of time off later.”

Gareda shifted her feet slightly in the dirt. “Fool. We are stopping because we have been at this for hours with no rest. Someone informed me this morning that that is the way you wanted it. I remember it well. You’d keep the morale of your troops in check.”

The Shiftry nodded. “Yes, that is true. I pride myself on how active my-”

Before he could explain himself further, Gareda spat at the ground under Birchs feet. The saliva sizzled for a second before sinking into the dirt. “Cut the crap. Find something else to pride yourself over, because you suck as a leader. Look around you. No one is together. No one is paying attention. If any brigands were sneaking up on us, now would be the perfect time for a preemptive strike. Just like that, the whole column is gone. Try telling the Queen how many hours the Pokemon under you have been out in the field then. I’m sure she’d be very appreciative.”

The Shiftry’s eyes shifted around in every direction besides the one Gareda was standing in. “I really don’t, uh, understand you, my Lord.” Gareda wasn’t having any of it. Lies like this deserved the worst; pity she wasn’t that kind of dragon.

“What I mean is, cut your troops some slack. No one functions for eight hours straight without a respite. No one. We’re stopping for the next fifteen minutes at least.” Gareda pointed a talon and a fin at the other Soldiers. “I’ll salvage your mess for you. Is that clear?” she growled.

Birch lowered his head. “Yes, my Lord. It’s understood.” The Shiftry turned on his heel and began to walk away. Gareda had her own plans for him, however. Being that he was the one in charge here prior to today, there was a trove of information hiding within him. Information Gareda could make good use of.

“Hold it, you. We are not finished yet, are we?”

“My Lord?”

Birch stopped dead in his tracks; the look imprinted on his face was one of horror. Smelling a murky scent emanating off the Shiftry, Gareda readied one of her arms to drive the point home.

“You’ve asked me a question, I will ask you one as well, except mine won’t be as pointless as yours. Since you are the one in charge of this region, it wouldn’t be too far fetched for you to know of certain ‘trends’ among the Pokemon here, correct?”

“y-Yes,” Birch answered, glancing up at the star on Gareda’s forehead.

“Well then…” The Garchomp’s feet shifted forwards into the dirt with a crunch that was downright soothing to her ears, like a massage for her oral canals, forcing Birch to look her dead in the eye. “Tell me it straight. What did you do in Greenfield?”

“n-Nothing, my lord.””

“Liar. Tell me straight, or else.”

“i-I’m telling you the struth!!” Birch screamed.

“Don’t shout at me, you overgrown piss bush. Answer the question.”

“I did.”

“Yeah, right you did. I guess that town’s pissed off for no reason, right? Half the crowd looked like they wanted us to drop into a hole in the ground. My eyes don’t betray me, Birch. You did something.” Gareda lifted a fin above Birch’s head; the tip gleamed like a knife in the sun, as if it were eagerly awaiting to be plunged into a hapless victim. “And you’ll tell me. Right this second.”

Birch’s mouth hung open for some time, sounding as if he was choking on his breath; by now, some Soldiers had gathered around and watched their former colonel be wrangled with morbid curiosity. From a Pokemon no one had dared to stand up to, to an equal. Not even evolution created bigger changes.

“o-Okay, okay! You got me. We were out of food a few weeks ago. So, I uh, I asked some of our men to take some from the residents. Of this village.”

“How much?”

“About h-half, my-”

“HALF?!” roared Gareda. “Have you lost your damn mind?! It was your job to watch over these bumpkins, not rob them blind! You took half of their food, and now you expect them to cooperate with us?!” She pulled an arm back and directed a toxic energy towards it; the talon at the tip began to glow with a purplish hue. The poison ready, she grabbed onto Birch with the other arm, pinning him in place. Birch yelped out a terrified cry. As if anyone was capable of saving him now.

“n-No, lord Gareda! Please, don’t!!”

“Do you value your life, colonel Birch?” Birch did nothing but shake in the clasp of Gareda’s talons. “I said, do you value your LIFE, COLONEL BIRCH?!”

“y-Yes!!”

“Then you will run back there right now, and offer a sincere, personal apology! Fix the mess, or I’ll fix you!”

Gareda kicked Birch in the chest, sending him flying backwards into a group of Soldiers who barely got out of the way before the humiliated colonel rolled on by. Birch staggered and ran off in the direction of Greenfield. Several of the troops who had watched chuckled behind the Shiftry’s far off back. Gareda, satisfied, let the poison fade from her talon.

‘Amazing what the threat of a Poison Jab will make the plants do.’

There was a jovial mood among the Soldiers. For a second, they felt relieved and free to be themselves, fidgeting with their dark green bands and laughing at the old colonel’s misfortune. All sorts of Pokemon, from Mandibuzz to Marowak, Crawdaunt to Machoke, off-colored Meowth to Bronzong and many others were among them. Most of them were recruits, just like Gareda was once upon a time. The Garchomp looked at them with a slight smirk, albeit one that appeared to be hiding something.

‘They haven’t lost their faith. Not yet, anyway.’

“Lord Gareda!”

A feminine voice shouted nearby. Gareda’s sensors tingled; two Pokemon were approaching from behind. A glance over the shoulder revealed a Magmar whose chest and lower regions were stained green, and a Toucannon whose beak was shiny and wet. Gareda scoffed as she turned tail to see them eye to eye.

“And look who we have here. I was wondering when you two jokers would show up.”

The Magmar scratched the back of her head. “Don’t be surprised. You ordered us to keep a larger eye over the rest of the column. You know we are supposed to be protecting you, right? We can’t just leave you because you tell us to… right?”

“Typical,” Gareda said. One of the Magmar’s feet shifted away in a loud and clumsy manner.

“Typical? But you barely know us.”

Gareda shrugged. “True. But I’ve known both of you clowns long enough to come to that conclusion myself.”

The Toucannon landed with a defiant look in his eyes. “You haven’t even known us for a week.”

“Exactly.” Gareda grinned.

The two escorters laughed awkwardly, their memories of having a fin pressed against their neck likely vivid in their minds still. It wasn’t until Gareda forced a growl of a laugh from her throat that the tension in their muscles finally relaxed a little, and they could share a laugh with the Garchomp for what it was worth. The others watching grew the courage to join in on it, albeit from a distance.

“I’m only joking, you two,” Gareda said, trying her best to keep her tongue from rolling out of her mouth. ‘Who am I fooling?’

“Well, no harm done, right?” the Toucannon said with a flutter of his wings. Gareda nodded and wanted to say something, only for the Magmar to cut her short.

“It’s hard to forget what proper harm looks like after a few days with you, too.”

They both laughed with a far heartier laugh. Gareda lowered her fins and just stared in a dull manner. ‘I’m not that intimidating, am I?’ The only thing keeping the moment from being downright awkward for her was the lack of other laughs. Either the rest didn’t think it was as funny, or they had lost interest. Gareda wasn’t in the mood to find out, and loudly cleared her throat instead.

“Alright alright, enough of this jabber. We didn’t start with the right foot, that doesn’t mean it has to stay that way. I’ve never asked you two what your names were, did I?”

The two escorts both replied with a nod. “Yeah, that’s right. No better time to ask us than right now, is there?” the Toucannon replied. “My name is Vli. That’s shorthand for Vlinder-yuliel, but almost no one can remember that. So I go by Vli instead.”

Gareda nodded and grunted. “Vli, is it? Alright then. Any reasons why your parents gave you the name Vlin… liel then, if no one can remember it?”

Vli lifted up his wings in a shrug. “Don’t know. Never bothered to ask them before being called up. I guess that’s something I’ll have to ask them once I can go back.”

“You’d do yourself a lot of favours with that, my guy,” the Magmar said.

“Oh, I sure would!” Vli enthusiastically replied. Gareda nodded along to them speaking. They sure were a lot more open to talking than she was.

“So Vli, where are you from, exactly?” the Magmar asked. The toucannon closed his eyes and made a short bow.

“It shouldn’t come as a surprise to either of you. I’m from the Azzurro Islands, all the way down south! Windswept Isle to be exact.”

“Interesting,” Gareda grumbled, placing a talon on her chin. “I have never been there before. What’s it like?”

“Sun, palm trees, exotic fruit!” the Magmar said with a cheer. “It’s a perfect little getaway if you ever need one.”

Gareda rolled her eyes. “Don’t start thinking about vacations now, duck face. We’re not going anywhere for the foreseeable future. Anyway Vli, I’ve heard that exact saying before from some other fop. Is any of it true?” she ordered.

“Sometimes. But we have some pretty nasty storms over there. Not to mention the rains, too.”

“Rain? Aww.” the Magmar let her arms hang. It had to have stung a little to learn that every Fire type’s biggest pet peeve was more than present in the supposed paradise. Gareda felt it as well, even with her scales usually making it more manageable.

“At least it’s no damn snow, I’ll say that much,” Gareda said with a few stretches of her neck. “That aside, why don’t you tell us your name next, Magmar lass?”

The Magar beat her chest a few times, her tail swaying through the air behind her. The fire on the tip of her tail began burning with a happy intensity, which Gareda’s sensors had picked up on. It was an oddity she never told anyone: A Garchomp’s sensors are meant to find prey and little more, yet hers were giving her far more than meal tickets.

“The name’s Luffy! And I’m from the Ruby Province!”

“Ah yes. The Craggy Hills, I take it?”

Luffy shook her head. “Close, but not quite. I’m from the Source Hills! It’s close by though, so some confusion is to be expected.”

Gareda shrugged. “Well, of course. Virtually every Fire Pokemon I’ve met is from that area. Never been anywhere else that’s nearly as rowdy.”

Luffy chuckled. “Rowdy? You could say that. But it’s a place with it’s own charm, you know! I’m sure you loved it there.”

Gareda nodded along. “Love’s a strong word, but sure, I enjoyed myself there. Being around dry earth’s pleasant enough for me.”

Vli lifted his beak up. “Hm? I’ve never been there, what do you mean with ‘rowdy’?”

“Think of it like a never ending festival. Life there is a circle of highs and lows. All sorts of fun characters and pleasant Pokemon in those hills. Outsiders don’t expect it. They see the lack of vegetation and immediately assume it must be dull there,” Luffy answered. “It might not be for everyone, but it’s home for anyone of Fire.”

Before Luffy or Vli had the chance to say anything more, Gareda grunted loudly. “What she means, Vli, is the people there are a lot more… open, shall we say. And that’s all that needs to be said about it. You can connect the dots yourself.”

A chuckle came out of Luffy’s throat. “You know, I’m somewhat open to you, Gareda.”

The Garchomp scoffed, turning away from Luffy and shaking her head. “Whatever floats your boat, duck face.”

“Indeed.” Luffy shyly smiled, while Vli struggled to contain an embarrassed laugh.

Gareda kept her back turned for a while, contemplating the next move. ‘The audacity of this fool.’ she thought, then shifted her head back at the Magmar with a fierce glare. “That’s enough jabbering for now. You can stop before half the column sees what you’re doing.”

“Yes, yes, no worries,” said Luffy in a jovial voice.

Gareda sighed, taking a few steps forward while letting her tail and back fin sway through the air a little. “Alright then. Enough waiting around for now. We’ve got ourselves an artifact to find.”

“What about Birch, though?” Vli asked.

“Who cares?”

Gareda put her fins up and roared at the column to get back in formation. It was time to get moving.
 

tomatorade

The great speckled bird
Location
A town at the bottom of the ocean
Pronouns
He/Him
Partners
  1. quilava
  2. buizel
I am back with another review! This time covering chappies 3 to 5.

M'queen

So this is a general worldbuilding ramble I'm putting here.

We get the first mention of a queen/queen's soldiers. An not exactly mentioned in a warm light. I remember in the last chapters some fear was put into George about being human, and I'm assuming these two things are connected. And not too soon after, it seems that was confirmed. In the eyes of the boys, at least.

A little too heavy on the exposition maybe? This is one of those cases where I almost expect the queen's soldiers to have this weird, subversive kindness because of how much Blitzer hates them lol. idk, by the time we get to the soldiers actually pulling some nonsense, this conversation may feel fairly redundant and overlong.

Chapter three in general feels like a character-solidifying chapter. We don't learn much new about them and they don't go anywhere, but both the audience and characters really solidify their motivations. Of course, going into chapter four has me wondering about how that will align with the story. George is being set up as a hero and it seems the queen's forces are the antagonists, at least in part. So my big question is the around the structure of the journey. I haven't seen talk of guild and such just yet, so they may be waiting in the wings, but I also wonder whether this will be a more lonesome adventure between George and Blitzer. idk. We shall see.

It's interesting how much other pokemon hate the queen. Not unrealistic, but a lot of monarchies rely on this godlike appreciation for the position with a healthy dose of fear--as if they can hear people speaking ill of them. It's a neutral observation, but if you're going for a sense of intimidation around the soldiers, I do think this could undermine that a little.

We get our first mystery dungeon here. It's always excitign to hit the milestone on any PMD fic. It's the most gameplay-heavy part of the games and requires the most interpretation for prose to make work.

You've gone for a more faintly weird approach, I see. There are some faint hints at the strangeness of the mystery dungeon that get stronger as they go deeper. You also keep the ferals! There are a lot of takes on them, but I've always liked the mystery of OG ferals, presenting this weird, alien world where even rationality fails.

You've also kept those final spotting points, as well. I actually see less of these in fanfic than I expect, usually the team just gets spat back out where they came in. I like it. It's a nice little island paradise in the middle of whatever the hell is happening in the dungeon. It's somethign to play with, too. Could you hide at the end of a dungeon if, for example, one were to be running from the queen's soldiers? I hope I get to find out at some point.

Uh on. Chapter five title just dropped and we are on red alert.

I never pinned this story for a survival story. I still haven't I guess, but the soldiers taking half the village's food is an interesting development. An early one, too--I was half expecting them to make a move a couple chapters later. Anyway, I wonder what disrection this will take. Hopfully one of two: either someone (probably Blitzer lol) stands up for teh town and consequences follow or they're forced to give up their food and suddenly that becomes a concern. I guess there are otehr options, but these are the only ones I can think of at the moment.

I also wonder about the fugitive they're hunting. I'm assuming it's George, and the reason noboy knows what he looks like is they also don't. I could be wrong, but considering how out of ordinary this seems to the town, I have to agree with George.

Final note, and one I wasn't sure whether to stick in here or with the character section.

The final conversation about the kids leaving the nest felt a little strange. I'm not sure what to make of it in the face of the boys' age. It's problem with a lot of younger-skewing stories, to be fair, but I think because this story still deals some more adult ideas it hitsa little more oddly here. Like, ther kids are definitely kids, so how normal is it to have a 'leaving home' conversation like Nera doea with Nero. On one hand, I want thtem to go on an adventure because that would be fun, but on the other hand, I agree with Nero. They are very young lol. They must be protected at all costs.

M'dudes

Another instance of George's history at an orphanage. I said before I liked that this kept up as an running part of his backstory. I maintain that while also hoping for a bit more detail on that front. So far most hints have been vague impressions of what life was like and what the headmistress was like, but I'm hoping this goes beyond hinting and actually digs a little deeper at some point.

The good half of the chapter 3 starting conversation is the bonding. It's very cute how willing the boys are to support each other. They skew younger, as I said last time. Or at least are more true to the younger protags in PMD games. Anyway, they're very charismatic. I can't wait for them to start their own cult.

Damn, George is rich. Blankets, dude? That's awesome.

We get a new dude! It's speedy! He's like the cool uncle, I guess. Nto responsible at all for the other children lol.

I wonder how often Blitzer wanders into mystery dungeons. A lot, I'm guessing, but he acts like this is his first time. Maybe he just be like that--he's a passionate fellow, after all. George is a good contrast, at first. He becomes an action hero very quickly lol--those spinirak didn't stand a chance.

It's sweet how considerate Blitzer is of the flowers. : ). And the little bit of longing he has for George's type. It's very humanising, I think, to have moments liek these. Not necessaruly jealousy--he doesn't seem the type for thet--but brief bits where he recognises George's advantages, I suppose.

And I love their little log-sitting illustration at the end. Very serene.

Damn if Blitzer isn't the greatest motivational speaker. His energy is infections, I can't lie, it's no wonder George has latched onto him lol.

As Nero tries to lecture Blitzer, his wink feels a little strange? It seems like he's trying to teach an earnest lesson, but the wink is a little jarrign in the middle of that. It's too playful, I think.

Anyway, I'm still having a lot of fun with this fic. I think I nitpicked this section a lot more than the previous, but I'm also waiting for the 'big thing' to drop in the fic and center it, I think. That's not to say I'm bored, just that we're in the beginning steps of story and I have a lot to think about.

So uh... great work! Keep writing!
 
Chapter 20

Gyeig

Junior Trainer
Pronouns
he/him
Partners
  1. samurott

Chapter 20 - Venturing Out​


A breeze flew over George as his eyes opened to the sight of a translucent blue sky. It felt as if he was hovering in midair. His feet kicked around in search of ground, seemingly under the impression that he was sleepwalking. Nothing but a void existed under him, however; No dirt, no rocks or grass, or any material the Pokemon of Greenfield used to build their homes. Just plain air.

‘Huh?’

This wasn’t the result of George having stumbled off in the middle of the night. One glance of his surroundings revealed a great azure expanse stretching beyond the furthest reaches of the horizon, with no company but the clouds under his feet. A strange warm sensation massaged the insides of his head. It was akin to entering a warm, cozy home after a long time spent trapped in a blizzard.

‘What is this place?’

Curious, George dipped a foot into the clouds below. To his surprise, they wouldn’t sink further than the length of a finger into the bed of cotton, even though the cloud itself was not providing any sort of resistance. He tried a few times, feeling, prodding, even forcing his feet down hard, but the task proved too herculean to do. The clouds pushed his feet back up. There was no way through them.

‘But how?’

Then, a gust of wind flew directly into him, coursing through each hair in his fur. Warm, powerful like a wretched seabound storm, and impossible to resist, George shielded his face. But what good could his little stubby Oshawott arms do? It was a miracle they weren’t sent flying backwards. Were it not for sudden mercy, he would’ve flown back. But the wind stopped, and a ray of light shone from above. George lowered his arms. The light was empty, yet a presence made itself known from that same ray of light.

“It is so good to see you, George. I have been waiting for you.”

Just like the clouds and deep blue yonder, the voice surrounded him from all sides, its echoes reverbrating high up and down. The sounds harmonized in such a way that multiple voices spoke. It was frightening, and majestic. .

‘h-Hello? Where am I?’

“You are in Eravate, George, just like you were when you went to sleep. I have simply taken you aside for a moment for the sake of your well being.”

‘Who are you?’

“An old friend, George. One you may not remember, but there will come a day when the knowledge of my true identity will hit you, and everything will fall into place. Rest be assured, there is no need to force this. I did not call you here to glorify myself. I came here to speak to you.”

‘...me? But why? I’m nothing special!’

“So you may think. And perhaps right now, you are. You were but a guardianless child who one day awoke in a strange body in a strange world, met a local village boy and became companions, and remained with him in the village hoping that someone may provide you answers for everything that has happened, and continues to happen. But you are meant for grander things, George. Eravate may not know your name yet. There will come a day where that all changes, when that mythical name George is recognized across this world.”

‘But why, though? Why would anyone see me in that way? I only just learned to defend myself.’

“Eravate is in trouble, George. You may not see it now, but it is inevitable that you will. A crisis is approaching, one ordinary Pokemon are incapable of solving. The world is at a crossroad. So many have fallen for it already, and so much more will be lost when the truth is finally revealed. But I know what I have seen. Amidst the disorder, only a handful were brave enough to make a stand for order and justice. For peace. For light. You are one of them, George. One of the few who may last against all odds.”

‘All odds? Do you mean the-’

“You will see in due time. Unfortunately, our time together runs short.”

‘Wait, what? Why?’

“The dawn is swiftly approaching, and someone will arrive with it. Someone whose importance to the crisis is paramount. Farewell for now, George.”

An exhaling sound echoed all around, as the sky turned black and the clouds disappeared. The dream closed off, and George was drawn back into his slumber, his unconscious body twitching erratically on the straws.

* * *​

Dawn broke some time later when a yawn tickled George on the ears, along with the sounds of weary limbs being stretched after a long night’s rest.

“Aah, it’s a new day!”

While Blitzer was greeting the morning with the energy of an Electric type, George groaned on his straw bed. His eyes creaked open at a glacial pace, tears welling up thanks to the light coming from Blitzer’s tail, and his arms and feet were aching. Not to mention the throbbing in his head. Either that strange dream had done a number on him, or he’d fallen asleep on the flute piece. The only part of him not groggy were the ears, which were actively listening to Blitzer’s footsteps drawing near.

“Alright, wake up sleepyhead! It’s the morning!”

“Ngh, a few more minutes, please…”

“Come on! Breakfast will be ready soon!”

“How can you be so sure it’s the morning, there’s barely any light in here-”

George’s nose woke up and caught a strong scent of fresh fruits and berries coming from under the door. ‘Looks like that excuse’s not going to work…’

“You smell it! It’s morning alright. Speedy can be here any minute, and I’m not leaving on an empty stomach, you hear?” Blitzer said. When it seemed like George was about to roll onto his other side, the Charmander put his claws on George’s leg and began dragging him off the warm straws and onto the murky cold of the ground. First touch of dirt on his fur sent alarmbells ringing.

“Aaah! Stop! Stop!!”

One eye blink later, George was kicking and waving all over the place, intensely slapping his tail around. Blitzer, now laughing, finally let go of his leg.

“There you go, George!”

“Thanks a lot, Blitzer…”

One smiling and the other grumpy, the two left their dark room. Breakfast this morning was a fruit salad: Everything from strawberries to chunks of orange, Chesto to help with the sleepiness, Oran to help with the grogginess, and a few other kinds of fruit were delivered to them on a plate, courtesy of Nera. All the bits were neatly organized per kind in a circle, their juices pooling up on the plate and coating everything in another layer of sweetness. George happily breathed it in. When the smell was strong enough to bury the dusty taste of the air, it had to be good. It was enough to forget about that morning’s dream for a while, and not let any of it slip by accident in a sleepy stupor. He’d be stuck here all day if he said a word about it.

While catching light coming from a dirty window, the two ate their fill. After some questions, a knock sounded on the door. Blitzer ran to answer, and Speedy replied. “Morning, Blitzer!”

“Good morning, Speedy!”

Nera leaned up against the table. “Oh, he is here already?”

George got up and walked towards the front door, only for the Raichu’s pale chest to appeared right in front of his face as he was about to step into the entry hall.

“Oops! My bad, laddie! Heheh.”’

George stumbled back into the table. “I didn’t think you’d come in here.”

Speedy gave a rough chuckle. “Just wanted to say hello to your parents, lad, that’s all. How’s life?” he asked the two parents, who both answered with a dull shrug.

“Not bad.”

“Could be worse.”

Speedy’s chuckling continued on. “Aw, don’t be such spoilsports, you two. T’is a beautiful day, forget about all that crap from yesterday, alright?” he went on to say.

Nero cleared his nose before pressing a forepaw against the side of his head. “Hard to forget about this ‘crap’ when it’s running our lives, Speedy.”

The Raichu nodded. “Oh believe me, I’ve had a whole bunch of experiences with ‘em already, but we’ve gotta move on with our lives, right? Whatever’s the case, I’m not letting no one stop me from being me, you hear? Can’t let anyone do that to me, or Junior.” A spark flew from his cheeks on the last few words. Both children took a step backwards; the parents seemed unimpressed.

“So how long is this chore of yours going to take, exactly?” Nera asked.

“A few hours,” Speedy replied.

Nero’s ears went flat against his head; Nera’s ears followed his lead shortly thereafter. “Why so long?” he grumbled with the voice of someone that had missed his morning caffeine.

“It’s a long story. I might have to go one town over, buy some things for my house,” Speedy told him. “I could use the extra hands to carry it all back home.” George bit his lip, anxiously awaiting the parents’ response.

“Then you better keep a close eye on them,” Nera said. ”They have a knack for getting themselves into trouble. With the soldiers around on top of that? I’m worried.”

Speedy nodded back. ”Don’t worry. I got this under control. If I can handle Junior, then these two little balls of energy won’t be a problem,” he said in a calm, confident voice, as if Blitzer and George were nothing more than boy scouts. Hearing this, Blitzer fidgeted around with his hands behind his back, shying away from the Raichu and towards the door. George felt a little prickly in his cheeks, which he couldn’t resist putting his hands on now.

‘b-Balls of energy? I didn’t think anyone would find me that adorable.’


* * *​

With neither parent seemingly suspecting a thing, the two boys got on their way, following Speedy out towards the village’s entrance. It was calmer in the streets than in the previous few days, the other village Pokemon hesitant to stop for idle chat. Everyone was doing the bare minimum to keep their lives afloat, whether that be keeping the village tidy, toiling on the half empty berry fields on the outskirts of town, or lumbering into the murky atmosphere of Hein’s Cafe. None of the other children were out; the silence in the town was palpable.

A familiar Druddigon was hanging a new item onto the board, something about the activities of the Queen’s Soldiers in the area. He was being half watched by a green-scarfed Fraxure, who gave a bored grunt as Speedy and the two passed by. No one said anything. Nothing more than a one eyed stare that acknowledged the other’s presence. Lance grumbled a bit behind everyone’s backs, out of a deep running exhaustion that couldn’t simply be slept off.

Once at the village entrance, Speedy finally rediscovered his voice. “‘Alright kids, here we are. Agate Township, rightwards! Should be about an hour before we’re there, and I’ll tell you who we’re looking for just before that.”

Blitzer stretched his arms as a yawn spilled out of his gaping mouth. “Haaargh, feels good to be out of town again, doesn’t it?” he said. George followed him up with a stretch of his own, then straightened the creases out of his bright red scarf.

“Sure does. It gets boring around here sometimes.”

Speedy chuckled. “Hahah, you might not believe it, Oshawott lad, but boredom is it’s own reward. Once you find yourself getting bored, you get the desire to move onto greater pastures,” he said with a swing of the lightning bolt at the end of his tail. “You get a longing for doing something good. Something beyond the ordinary. You must feel it today, right?”

George was taken back to his dream that morning. If he squinted slightly, he could hear those echoes all around him. It sparked the imagination up, sending it flying right into that fantastical wonderland he loved, with all the swashbuckling fantasies of a fully grown Pokemon in tow. He couldn’t help but smile at the thought. “Of course I do.”

“That’s the spirit!” Speedy said as he shuffled forward over the path, scattering dirt over the grass and his feet. “Trust me lad, you’ll need that hunger in you. Whatever might happen, you better be ready for anything. It’s a wild world out there.”

“Trust me, I’ll be as ready as I need to be,” George said with a slap of his tail. ‘I had started to get that idea anyway!’

The Raichu nodded. “Good on you, lad.”

“He won’t be as ready as me, though.” Blitzer swung an arm around George’s neck, who jumped in response. A smirk was plastered all over his face as he nudged George with his arm, all smug and confident without so much as flinching. George had only an envious stare to return.

‘His back healed pretty quickly, didn’t it.’

“Now that’s the spirit, you two,” Speedy said with a turned head. “Knew this was going to be the response I’d get from you lads! That’s why I picked you two of all people to come and help me out here, actually.”

Blitzer’s tail tip twitched with curiosity. “Why, is there no one else in the village who thinks so?”

Speedy’s ears went flat as he let out a sigh. “Something like that. Lads, I love the village and all, but sometimes I get the feeling that everyone’s just given up, you know. They’re all just content waitin’ around for others to pull ‘em out of the mud. You know what I mean?”

“Yeah, that sounds like my parents,” Blitzer said. “They’re very restrictive all of a sudden. I know it’s not nice for them to see me coming home all scratched up, and I respect that, I really do. I know they care about me and mean well and all, but they’re trying to protect me from everything. They were getting antsy about me helping out with the food situation, even though we’d starve if no one would go.”

“That sounds like Nero and Nera, alright,” Speedy said while stretching his arms a little.

Blitzer exhaled through his nose heavily, as if holding onto his breath was a heavy burden on his shoulders. “Don’t see this as me not liking them, by the way. I love my parents. They really do care for me a lot, but I know who I am. I know I’ll have to get out into the real world eventually, and I need to prepare for that. I’m not going to be a Charmander forever.”

“No, I understand you alright,” Speedy said. “You’re like a second son to me at times, Blitzer. I know how you feel. They’re apathetic to the world, even though the world isn’t getting any better, is it?”

Blitzer shook his head. “No.”

“Exactly. That’s to be expected, really. Greenfield likes not being bothered.”

Having taken in the conversation, George’s curiosity got the better of him. Blitzer’s troubles with his situation, he understood. Speedy was another story, though. Why would he want to put himself into danger? He had a kid to look after, at the end of the day.

“Hey, what do you mean with ‘not being bothered’? It’s not like everyone here’s afraid of their own shadow. Half the village went to Azure Hills a few weeks ago, didn’t they?”

Speedy breathed in deep; for a slight second, the air was charged. “Something other than that. The most confrontational anyone else gets is Hein dealing with idiots who’ve had too much juice.”

Blitzer cracked up. “Tell me about it.”

“That ghost’s one charmer, I have to admit. There’s something about that attitude I like, if you get me,” Speedy said, smirking. “Anyway, that’s about as defiant as it gets. And I just can’t wrap my head around it. Truth to be told, I don’t like seeing Junior grow up in that environment. I want him to be able to stand up for himself when he’s older. How is he ever going to have that chance if we just keep stewing around? It’s not going to happen, is it?”

George shrugged. “I guess not.”

“Exactly! And that’s why we’re going where we’re going. That’ll be my first step towards broadening the horizon…” Speedy’s pace slowed down as he stared out over the wide emerald plains, as if longing for something. “Anyway, that’s my little rant. I haven’t actually heard you talk about this yet, George. What is your drive to keep going?”

“My drive?” George replied.

“Yeah, your drive,” Speedy retorted. “What motivates you? Because it takes one brave lad to toe to toe with thieves with me, I’ll tell you that.”

George had to take a deep breath.That morning’s dream came back to mind. The echoes set to a backdrop of a brightening sky, explaining how both he and Blitzer had a higher purpose. That would remain behind lock and key, however. Too many questions to deal with.

“I didn’t have the best childhood before I came to Greenfield.” George looked out over the green fields, towards the distant outline of a great, snow capped mountain. “You might have heard some things from others, but the truth is worse than that. I grew up in a foster’s home. I was left there by my parents. I don’t know why. But they did. Since then, my life was nothing but stress, fear, and being helpless. The people at that foster’s home hated my guts from the day I walked in. The other kids there saw me as an easy target. And there was nothing I could do about it. Whenever I tried to stand up against one, the other always knocked me back down… Every day, for years…”

He’d felt it come up in his throat while explaining, but he couldn’t hide it. No matter how badly he wanted to. Bottled up emotions fresh from Pandora’s box had grabbed him by the throat.

“They used me, fooled me, betrayed me, did everything you could think of to me… and I was powerless! I didn’t have the strength to do anything about it, either. It’s like your worst nightmares about Junior, Speedy. That was my life, for years…”

Tears rolled down George’s face, leaving a wet trail behind on his pale fur. Blitzer and Speedy had both come to a stop, and each was holding one of his arms, softly patting him with a digit or two.

“It’s okay, George. Just let it all out,” Speedy told him.

“You know I’ve always got your back,” Blitzer whispered in his ear.

“Thank you…” George said with a sniff, his tail jittering on the dirt below. “That’s why I’m here. No one should have to go through that, no one. When I get older, I want to make this world a better place for the weak. I want to be the person I wish I had back home. I might be scared, I might fear what others will think or say, but I want to do what I can. One day, I won’t be too weak to defend myself anymore. There’s so much evil out there in the world, and I want to show it with everything I’ve got! That’s who I want to be!”

For a brief moment, all those worries, all those foul memories of home vanished through his fingers like sand, and in their place arose a spectacular image of himself. His fully evolved form, with its long swords and strong muscles, the mustaches flowing from a wise snout, and those fierce, fearless eyes that could laugh at the mightiest of foes… one day, that was going to be him. And nothing was going to get in the way of that.

“Blitzer, Speedy, I’m ready for this.”

Blitzer grabbed George by the shoulder; his snout grew a fierce smile. “Me too.”

George nodded back at him with a strong grin of his own. “We’re going to do this!”

Speedy chuckled heartily. “That’s the George I believe in right there. You’re a lot fiercer than you’re willin’ to admit, lad. Trust me on that,” he said as he got in between the two. “So then, what are we waiting for? We’ve got some thieves to kick around!”

“Yeah!”

And so, wearing their hearts on their sleeves, the three Pokemon made their way through the fields, past forests and through thorns towards Agate Township, where a fateful day was sure to be waiting for them.
 

SparklingEspeon

Back on Her Bullshit
Staff
Location
a Terrace of Indeterminate Location in Snowbelle
Pronouns
She/Her
Partners
  1. espurr
  2. fennekin
  3. zoroark
Review for chapters 16 – 25

Hello! After a long, long time, I’m back to review this fic again. It seems like I left off right at the beginning of part two last time, so for this review I’ll be starting from there and reviewing the next ten chapters.

It took a while to get there, but the plot is finally picking up some! I think it’s interesting to see the perspectives broaden and capture the Evil Empire(tm) that was hinted at in the first part. It seems like they’re somewhat morally grey; the narrative doesn’t frame Gaereda as a bad person, but it doesn’t seem like she’s working for very good people and she does some kind of brutal things in service to them. It seems like she has a strong moral compass, though; I thought it was a really strong establishing moment for her to force the soldier who’d been picking on the local villages to go and apologise. Imo establishing moments like that are something you do really well. I think it’s also interesting seeing the difference between how the townspeople view the empire (describing it as something out of star wars and distrusting the soldiers), versus seeing the actual soldiers and realising it’s a bit more complicated/the Act Of Evil they were responsible for in the first part was down to the corruption of a lower officer. It brings it back into the orbit of the real world, especially given the queen seems to be a bit of an Evil Figure, but raises some more questions about who these people are and what they’re doing here. It doesn’t seem like this is the wealthiest part of their kingdom, at the least; I’m guessing their hold here is a lot weaker than it is elsewhere/this is on the outskirts of their realm (if this was established in the first part it’s been a while so I might have forgot some things).

One thing I’ve been consistently noticing tbh is that everyone in this is so *mean* to Blitzer and George. Like I get that they’re kids and their village is a kind of insular place in a shitty situation and so the people there aren’t going to be very happy and bright, but it’s surprising to me how much the adults in this story just seem to maintain a somewhat dysfunctional relationship with their kids. Some of them are nice, but far more are nasty, and even Speedy, the one adult here who really treats Blitzer and George like they’re on his level, is doing a similar thing to his own kid. Like there’s nothing overtly abusive from adults who aren’t already villainised, but it’s interesting to me how there just seems to be a vibe of contempt and negativity that none of them can escape when they’re in their parents’/guardians’/betters’ eyes. Given how you telegraph the coming-of-age/childrens’ struggles themes in this story, I can only assume this relates to the themes in some way, though I guess we’re a bit too early in right now to really throw a guess at what the larger scale implications of it are going to be. (it’s also possible that this is down to unreliable narrator, and Blitzer’s Pre-Evolving state or George’s glum outlook on life is painting everything in similar shades)

The story has been telegraphing sus vibes from Speedy for a while but not really delving deeper into it, and that resolved itself in chapter 25. It’s getting clearer and clearer now how the story is closing around George, and Speedy seems to be another piece in that puzzle. I think it makes sense in hindsight that Speedy acts so different from the rest of the village, and highlights some interesting themes too – Speedy is, or was, part of the rebellion, so he’s the only adult who seems to have some life left in him, whereas everyone else has largely given up or turned villainous. I think it’s going to be interesting to see what happens when the threads of fate fully close in here (as they seem to be by the end of this chapter) – I feel like he’s going to have to make some kind of decision when push comes to shove.

I’m guessing the thread wrt Blitzer losing his temper more and seeming more and more unhinged is building up into something about evolution/teenage years. It definitely seems like it came on a bit suddenly, but I’ll be interested to see where it goes…

I’ll say there are some spots where it would be worth cutting the obvious. For instance, in chapter 21, “orange scales and mud went together like toothpaste on bread” is sufficient; we don’t need the second part because toothpaste sandwiches are pretty universally gross lol. In general I think your prose is really competent; though sometimes you switch into the present tense so watch out for that imo. Tbh if there’s any criticism I have, it’s the use of ‘saliva swallowed’ as an idle t-posing function, it’s just so gross and evokes the image of like, these characters drooling literal mouthfuls of spit instead of “oh they gulped”

Overall, I liked what I read here! There’s a definite sense of progression now that we’re past the introductory part, and I feel like your sense of pace/character/plot progression has been improving a lot as I’ve gone on. Until the next set, and good luck with your writing!

~SparklingEspeon
 

Gyeig

Junior Trainer
Pronouns
he/him
Partners
  1. samurott
At last, got time to respond to some reviews. Sorry for keeping you both waiting, but here goes:

@tomatorade
The subversion / exposition heaviness is... kind of a mixed bag in my eyes, looking back. Blitzer rants a lot about how awful the Soldiers are, which is breaking that all too familiar writing advice of 'hey, actions speak louder than words'. At the same time, Blitzer is thirteen, and he's... definitely not someone who gives information without his own bias coming into play. Plus, I wanted to establish that Soldiers aren't viewed positively, before actually showing 'em doing something bad. Maybe something to touch up again in the future... not right after I re-edited all these chapters already.

Also, George and Blitzer are supposed to be thirteen - earlier drafts of this still had me unsure about how old they were, but they're thirteen.

@SparklingEspeon
Moral grayness - or 'there is a reason for everything' - is a huuuge theme in this fic, and Gareda is the primary example. Yeah, she's ruthless, but she has standards and morals. You'll see more of this in the future.

And yeah, Greenfield's adults all sound kinda mean, and a lot of that is down to people wanting to stay out of trouble. Throw Blitzer into the mix, and... yeah, not gonna end too well lol.

One more thing - the 'swallowing saliva' prose is absolutely awful. It's one of the main things I got rid of during re-editing recently. Buuut I didn't get around to these chapters you've read, and all the ones there are unfortunately still there :sadbees:
 
Chapter 21

Gyeig

Junior Trainer
Pronouns
he/him
Partners
  1. samurott

Chapter 21 - Agate Township​


The trail wound its way through the emerald fields, finally reaching over a small hilltop. Standing atop this hill, Speedy was ecstatic to see a large collection of buildings sprawled out over a large area. “There it is, boys! Agate Township!” he shouted, nudging George and Blitzer in the direction of the town with his arm.

Agate Township was encircled by a moat. Three bridges were the lone arteries connecting the town with the outside world: One dead ahead, the other opposite, and the last on the far left. Standing under twin banners bearing the Vined Crest were a handful of Soldiers keeping watch over the Pokemon entering and leaving; their voices a drop of rain in the storm of liveliness audible even from a distance. There were Water types swimming in the moat, birds taking off from a central roosting tower bearing bags, and busy streets. Tthis was a town of many thousands, at the very least.

“Wow…” Blitzer whispered.

George shrugged. “I’ve seen bigger.”

“Look George, there’s the post office! Look at all those bird Pokemon with the purses! And there- that’s smoke! Furnaces, fellow fire types!” Blitzer ecstatically pointed to the various vistas around the town. For George, most of it seemed old fashioned, or downright primitive if the rickety wooden bridges were anything to go by. Crude structures, filthy streets, it made him think of how his hometown looked five hundred years earlier. Not much different, most likely.

‘For a place called Agate, it sure doesn’t look very green.’

“Yes yes, here it is,” Speedy continued. “Now, I will warn you, do not go into this place expecting Greenfield, alright? Big towns mean different folks. They don’t care much for folks disturbing the peace. So don’t go runnin’ off. And I’m serious. You’ll get into some trouble, I can’t help you out that much, alright? We’re goin’ in, we’ll find out where our thieves are, we take back what’s mine, and that’s it. Alright?”

George and Blitzer were silent for a while, as they took in the sight one more time. Even from this hill, Speedy’s words held merit. The Pokemon strolling through the streets was as joyless as ice, their heads hanging low and their strides practically scraping the ground. Aside from the occasional yell of a child, the voices over the town were emotionless. And then there was the thick smell of mud hanging over the area, like smog over a metropolis. George remembered it well.

“Yes, it’s clear.”

Blitzer kept watching over the town, his cheek muscles tensed up and making a soft chirping sound with his throat. “Is it really that bad?”

Speedy patted him on the back with his tail. “Believe me, it won’t be. Just stay close to me and we’ll be fine, alright?”

“Okay.”
The three eased their way down the hill and approached the guard. After a hasty control of the rough cloth bag Speedy had taken with him, and George and Blitzer’s scarves, they were let into the town. Like small fish in a dirty pond, they followed Speedy through the masses, feeling discomforted by the sights of Agate Township up close. The Pokemon here all had lifeless eyes. Whether they were grass types like Roselia, water types like Poliwhirl, bug types like a lone Leavanny, no one was happy to be here. Given the state of the streets, that wasn’t an odd way to feel. Cracked stones, covered with a layer of mud that no besides one Palpitoad was cleaning up. At times slippery, always plain filthy, that was every street here, aside from the spaces in between buildings which weren’t any better. Either they were pure mud, covered with clutter, or grassy and wet. A funky smell hung in the air: Mud mixed with something resembling body odours, if George had to guess. He’d rather keep his nose pinched.

It wasn’t until they reached a small marketplace somewhere in the center that Speedy turned to them and stopped. “Alright, I need to go have a little conversation here. You two stay good and don’t run off, you hear? Just stay put and I’ll be back in no time,” the Raichu said, then ran off into the crowd without so much as a glance back. He looked like he was in a hurry.

“Well, there he goes,” George said. “Wasn’t the whole point of bringing us here being that we could help him?”

Blitzer’s tongue dipped out of his mouth for a second. “I don’t know,” he said, keeping his tail close as he looked around all over the place. “This town sure has changed since I’ve last been here.”

George folded his arms and drew closer towards the Charmander, as a brutish Pangoro lumbered past carrying a stone slab of some kind. “What do you mean?”

“It was a lot brighter here a few years ago, believe it or not. Vibrant, and energetic. Now everything’s looking worn and dilapidated. Including the people, at that.”

George kept an eye trained on the market. Sun poked through a crop of clouds, highlighting a few stands watched over by miserable Pokemon. Like the Scyther selling wood blocks who was using a sharp arm like a toothpick, the Miltank selling cheese while slumped over the stand, a Tsareena kicking at the air over her small assortment of colored rocks, and a Kangaskhan sat at the center of it all, running a claw through the apron she wore with a grim frown, her child looking up worried and fearful from its pouch.

“You could say that.”

“What even happened here, I wonder. Everyone’s given up. Look, the stone there’s all chipped. No one’s refined it.” Blitzer tapped a claw on the side of the building right next to them. A passing Pokemon suddenly leaned a few inches away from his face.

“Cause there’s no money for it, kid.”

Blitzer stumbled back, almost tripping over a bucket left lying around; a passing Diggersby was walking away laughing. George went blue, then red in the face. ‘What a jerk! Who does that?’ he thought to himself, before one more look over the area got him to calm down. Just one more tired looking Pokemon trying to find a little joy in this town, what little of it there was left to be found.

“Are you okay?” George asked Blitzer.

“Yeah… I’m fine. Just bumped my foot a bit, that’s all.” Blitzer replied. George found something else to be concerned over, however. It wasn’t just that the stones had been damaged by rain, the whole building looked slipshod. Stone intersected with bits of wood and earth that clearly was a half baked measure to prevent the cold from getting in. Besides that, the building turned from mostly stone to all wood halfway to the top. Written in a maroon paint were the words “Illusion Cafe - Rolf’s Bar” on a sign at the left edge of the building, where a shady looking Breloom wearing a coat and a slight grin was entering the building.

“Uh, why did Speedy leave us here?” George asked, looking up at the building; some kind of movement could be heard coming from above.

“Don’t think there’s any place better. Would you rather stand there?” Blitzer asked, gesturing with one claw at a Soldier at the other end of the marketplace with a half churr, half growl like sound. George anxiously hummed back, staring at the spear wielding Medicham in the distance. In a way it was amusing how dreadful the color green was in town. There was always a soldier marking, banner or shady looking Pokemon attached to it.

“I’d rather not,” George whispered. ‘He’s starting to sound a lot more like an animal these last two days…’

“Where’s Speedy, though… this is taking too long,” Blitzer swayed his tail around.

“He said he’d be back soon,” George said.

“If this is what he meant with ‘soon’, I’d hate to see him slow,” Blitzer churred back.

George clicked his tongue and drummed his hands on his belly. “Is he always like this?”

Blitzer shrugged. “Pretty much. It’s not the first time. But it sure is the worst time.”

“Uh-huh,” George hummed back. He found himself looking up at the cafe again. There was a strange noise coming from the same direction that the earlier sounds of movement were audible from. “Do you hear that?”

“Yeah, I do,” Blitzer said, approaching George. “What is that noise?”

Nothing could be seen, but it was unmistakably coming from upstairs. It was some sort of ragged gasping. Blitzer suddenly tapped George on the shoulder. “Wait, I think I heard this back home one-”

“Oh sweet Arceus, there you are!” Their attention was dragged away from the window as Speedy came running around the corner. “Come lads, let’s go!” he hurriedly said, nudging both George and Blitzer forward with his paws.

“H-hey!” Blitzer chirped. “What’s with the rush?”

“Nothing!” Speedy said nervously. George felt queasy inside. ‘Well, I guess that’s that.’

Once they were a block removed from the cafe, Speedy finally let go of their backs. One look at his feet was enough to keep George cranky for a while. A brown-grey paste now covered his feet; the bits that had gotten in his fur gave it a slimy feel. Blitzer didn’t fare any better. Orange scales and mud went together like toothpaste and bread, in the sense that they don’t go together at all. The amount of scrubbing it would take to get the spatters that got in between the creases out made George bite his lip. Or perhaps the uneven stones they were walking on were the cause of that.

“Where are we going?” Blitzer asked.

“You’ll see,” Speedy said, soft toned. The streets of Agate Township were not the place to discuss the kind of activity they were steeling their nerves for. If their odd mannerisms hadn’t given them away yet to half the town, which they likely had, George couldn’t help but feel like they were being watched. His ears went down against his head as Speedy took his hand to keep him on the move. There was an odd omen in the air.

“Right then, it’s just around the corner,” Speedy whispered, now holding both of them back as they were about to make the turn into the area he had been talking about. “We need to be careful here. They’re not expecting me in particular, but they are expecting trouble regardless.”

“What are we up against?” Blitzer said, the flame on his tail acting up. The tension in the air had grown; George could feel it. A few steps forward and they were facing their enemy. Like a dashing knight up against scoundrels. His tail slapped against the ground in anticipation.

“About three or so.”

“How do you know that?”

“Talked to a contact who knows this town like none other, don’t worry about it.”

George and Blitzer looked each other in the eye; doubt was visible on both sides. George had one hand over his scalchop, while Blitzer held one claw up. “So what’s the plan?” George asked.

Speedy hummed. “Simple. We’re going in there, and we’ll confront them. If they’re not going to play coy, we’ll attack.”

George’s feet shifted backwards into the edge of a muddy patch. ”W-we’re just attacking like that? What if they-”

“Fighting’s the language all Pokemon understand, George. You know that, right?”

George gulped, along with a nod. “Yeah, but-”

“Exactly. A good softening up will teach these idiots a lesson they won’t soon forget. Or ever forget, for that matter. And besides, it’s not like these Pokemon don’t deserve what’s comin’ their way…” Speedy grumbled. George didn’t say anything back. The Raichu sounded far too determined for anyone to try and change his mind now.

“Anything else we need to worry about?” Blitzer asked.

Speedy shook his head. “Keep your heads cool. That’s it. Are you two lads ready?”

Blitzer pumped his fists. “Yes!”

George tapped on his scalchop. “I guess so.” ‘So much for the less hostile approach. I know this town’s like home, and fighting is as plain as, well, plains, but- nevermind. Fighting is just the way it goes.’

Speedy shot a smirk back. “Then let’s do it.”

* * *​

It was quiet enough to hear a pin drop as the three made their way around the corner. Halfway across the dim alley they had now entered, they stopped. A lone candle hung by a rickety door that looked liked it would crumble if you tried to open it. Speedy gently pushed it. George steeled his nerves. Never in a million years growing up did he believe he’d ever get himself caught up in shady buildings without a ten foot pole. And there were plenty of shady buildings in his hometown, just like this one. Gloomy, abandoned, even haunted. Wishful thinking, perhaps. Back home, you always had to be ready for anything.

The door swung backwards into a dusty room with a low counter on the other end. A grey ball of fur lay half asleep on the counter, only emitting a dull groan as the light landed on its face. The Pokemon’s face looked like a mask that had been used for ten years straight. George and Blitzer couldn’t look away. There was something oddly alluring about that weary face. Something that made it impossible to pay attention to much of anything else.

“What’s your business?”

The shopkeeper’s voice sounded half like a hiss and half like a whisper. Aged, some might say, tired is what others would proclaim it to be. All George thought of was the weary voice of his grandmother, who he hadn’t seen in a long time.

“I’m here to buy,” Speedy said, entering the room. George and Blitzer cautiously followed behind, George carefully inching forward and Blitzer caressing his tail like a shield.

“And you need to bring your damn kids in here… why exactly?”

“Busy day, that’s all.”

“Blegh. I hate kids.” The shopkeeper propped their head off the counter, and dusted off their grey, oily coat that only a Cincinno could have. Speedy nodded back; George and Blitzer found themselves standing next to each other, unsure of what else to do besides standing back. Blitzer especially wasn’t at ease; the little interactions he had with the Cincinno lady that he’d occasionally see in Greenfield weren’t anything like this. “So then… what’s it you want?”

“Heard you got yourselves a nice shiny badge a few days ago. What’s it made of?”

“Copper, or somethin’. Some other stuff in there too. Think it’s got somethin’ to do with that A lliance bunch that got killed off some time ago. You got any particular need of that stuff?”

Speedy hummed a dull tone. “Oh yes. Running an errand for the ‘Quills. Need something from them, and they asked for somethin’ in return, of course. I chose this.”

The shopkeeper’s ears perked up. “I’m assuming you got the money for this?”

“Oh yes, I do,” Speedy retorted in a way that lived up to his name.

“Well, why not just give the Quills money, then?”

“Lack of materials, they say.”

“Lack of materials? The Quills? Pfft. Find that hard to believe. Whatever. Just show me the money, yeh? I’ll go get your little trinket and you then get those kids outta here.”

Speedy’s gaze soured. “Before I do that, why don’t you show me the badge? I’m not giving you a cent without it.”

The Cincinno hissed. “Who do you think you’re talkin’ to? You think you run this place here? Either show me the money, or I’ll show you and your dumbarsed kids the door,” they grumbled. Speedy clenched his fists.

“I’m not giving you a damn thing for my own property!”

The shopkeeper’s eyes lit up; before they had the chance to cry out, Speedy’s tail took on a silver shine and struck them across the face, knocking the Cincinno back into a shelf.

“Quick you two lads, follow me!” Speedy growled between his teeth.

“ARgh! Guys, we’ve got trouble!!”

Speedy leapt onto the counter, only to struggle to keep himself balanced; his tail was still charged up with energy. Blitzer jumped into the fray with him, kicking a vase and shattering it on the floor. By the time George realized what was happening and had made the decision to follow suit, a Toxicroak ran out of the backroom. The sound of an electric discharge racked the room, and the Toxicroak stumbled back.

“Hey, what d’you think you’re doing?”

“Takin’ back what’s mine!”

The Toxicroak was quick to his feet, his claws glowing purple as they stabbed at the air Speedy was in - It was as if the Raichu was jumping in three different directions. Blitzer spat a ball of fire, which broke into cinders upon contact with the purple claws. Another discharge; the Toxicroak stumbled backwards into the other room, only for a very dark and very angry Thievul to take its place.

George climbed onto the counter, knocking a foul smelling bottle over. Sparks and embers flew around his face as he struggled to keep decent footing. In the blink of an eye, Speedy had jumped away from attacks twice, the Thievul had jumped to try and keep up with Speedy, and Blitzer had already ran into the next room. George’s head spun. The lone Pokemon he was capable of keeping up with was the Cincinno, who was getting up. George pulled on his aquatic energies and spat a glob out at them. It didn’t leave a mark.

“Oi, you little…!”

The Cincinno grabbed a bottle and flung it at George’s head. Gasping, George threw himself off the counter; a bottle broke where he had stood right after. He turned his head and resumed spitting; a stream of water hit the Cincinno square on the leg. They made a dull cry with their throat and slipped off the counter. Upon getting up, an enraged glare emerged on the gray Pokemon’s tired face.

“I’ll toss you to the Sharpedos, you little!!”

George received a blow on the cheeks; it was like having a toy car thrown at his face. The thief and the little knight struggled, slapping their arms at each other. The Cincinno was out for blood; pulling out hair, trying to claw at George’s eye, tried kicking him from his feet.

“Haargh! Get back here you coward!”

Swipe after swipe, George struggled to keep up. It was too dangerous to try and reach for his water now. The Cincinno slowly pushed him back into a corner. There had to be something he could do. His scalchop. Without thinking, he drew it, and started swinging. The Cincinno jumped around him. Swing, miss, slash, miss. Every cut George made hit nothing but air. It took infinitely more out of him. Like butter, the Cincinno got George to make a wide swing; George staggered and lost control of his footing. The Cincinno’s little teeth stuck out their mouth. They raised their leg, jabbing their knee into George’s chest.

“Oof!”

“End of the line, flame boy!”

The breath shot out of his lungs along with a spatter of saliva. George fell back into the corner. The Cincinno bared its little teeth. George’s hand touched an odd surface - a small bottle. Without thinking, he flung it forward, where it shattered on the Cincinno’s head. The Cincinno screeched. With a hoarse yelp, it bolted for the door.

George went looking for his scalchop, gagging from the foul odour that now permeated throughout the building from all the broken bottles and whatever else all the fighting had tipped over. After finding his scalchop, George climbed back onto the wet counter, holding in his breath. All around, objects had been being thrown off shelves and onto walls and the ground with abandon. Speedy and Blitzer were in the backroom; George jumped off the other side of the counter and ran into the back room after them. It was a mess. He was staring right at a Victreebel screeching as it rubbed at a large burn on its body. Behind the Victreebel were the Thievul, the Toxicroak, and now a Luxio too. Behind them were Speedy and Blitzer, backs against a half empty shelf.

“Got a lot of guts coming here stealing from us.”

“You started it. Shouldn’t have taken what’s mine.”

“Ours now.”

“Got it back, didn’t I?” Speedy said; a glint shone from his hand in the sparse light present in the room.

“I’m sure your guts would fetch a pretty price. Works out in the end! Your kids too. Idiot.”

Speedy put his foot down, his cheeks furiously sparking. “HEY! Who in Arceus’ name says that about kids!”

“I did,” the Luxio replied. “Should’ve thought this through before you ran in here.”

George climbed onto the Victreebel, who violently winced upon feeling George’s feet press into its leafy skin, sending George tumbling down the other side. The three thieves still standing all turned their heads, bearing smirks that slid through George’s confidence like a hot knife through butter. Smirks only killers wore.

“Well well, number three. Who knew country folk were so stupid?” the Luxio chortled, sparking his claws while staring at George as a predator stares at prey.

“Pft. Should’ve gone there earlier,” the Toxicroak hissed after.

“After we’re done here, sure-”

A zap flew through the room - The Toxicroak stumbled back onto his knees. “Argh! Cheap little…!” he grumbled as he got back up. It was three against three. Three monsters against three village bumpkins. The sparks on the Luxio’s claws left George panicking as they approached.

All was ready to go straight into the Distortion, when an explosive sound burst through the front of the store. All six turned their heads, the children shielding their ears; the front had simply disappeared, and in its place stood a monstrous figure wielding two glowing scythes.

“S-Soldiers!”

The beast bearing the green cape barged into the front of the store. The three thugs fell into its scowl; with spit and snarls, she put her feet down.

“You’ve got one chance. Surrender, or else.”

The Luxio growled, and leapt past George and its fallen comrade onto the counter. The other two left Speedy and Blitzer behind to join the electric cat in meeting their new challenger. The old prey wasn’t going anywhere, after all. George crawled away from the Victreebel towards the other two, who stood like statues against the back wall of the store room.

“We’re not going anywhere, slick.”

“You’ve got three seconds. Three.”

“Surrender? After you broke our humble little store?”

“Two.”

“You think you run this town now?”

“One.”

“No surrendering!”

With a bang, the clashes in the front resumed. George reached the wall in between a hyperventilating Speedy and a nervously churring Blitzer, both of whom were holding their tails against their bodies.

“Lads, stay calm… I think I know how to get out of here,” Speedy said. A scream came from the front of the store. “Stuff this in your scarf.”

Speedy pressed the badge into George’s hand. “Uh, wha-”

“Don’t even think, just do it!”

“O-okay…” George whimpered as he did as was asked. A roar filled with demonic rage wracked the building, sending George, Blitzer and Speedy shivering down onto their rears.

“How are we going to get out of here?!” Blitzer yelled.

“Just stay calm! I’ll explain to them why we’re here, alright?” Speedy yelled back. A shelf crashed in the front. “We’re getting out of here, trust me.”

The three were left huddling together for comfort as the violence raged out front. Roars, yells, screeching and whimpering, wood cracking and glass shattering, separated from them by little more than a weak wooden frame and an unconscious Victreebel, whose occasional bouts of resistance were put down by its aching burns. George felt Blitzer grab onto his arm; the Charmander was fiercely staring past the plantlike into the portal, gritting his teeth as if waiting for his turn to jump into the fray. George backed off into Speedy’s fur, as the sounds of the storefront beng torn apart drew to a close.

“Argh- Stop… no!”

With a crash and a thunder, the counter’s top was ripped apart into a splinter. Shivers crawling up their spines, the three watched as it walked in. Her steps, which made the ground weep in agony. Her talons, which had run red and left a trail over the floor. Her chest, moving back and forth with each ragged breath that ran through her body. Her eyes piercing through the air with a glare to rival even the mythicals in their worst nightmares. She kicked the Victreebel away, who screamed as it rolled against a wall, purple fluids leaking out of its body.

“What do we have here?”

“M-m-madam! W-we, uh, this isn’t what it seems, okay? We were j-just looking to-” Speedy said, choking on just about every word he could get out of his mouth that wasn’t partially a chirp or peep. George could feel his and his own skin shiver up under the fur.

“Here to retrieve stolen goods. Correct?”

“Y-yes…”

“Did you find what you were looking for?”

“Y-yes.”

“Good. Then leave. You are interfering with official Vined Crest business.”

“S-sorry?”

The Garchomp suddenly raised one foot, then stomped it straight through the flimsy floorboards. “You heard me. Get out of here. Immediately.”

Speedy grabbed George by a tuft of his fur. “L-let’s go, you two,” he said, gulping as he dragged George along past the Garchomp and through the gap in the counter, Blitzer fast on his feet behind them audibly chattering his teeth. As Speedy dragged him along, George couldn’t keep his eyes open. It felt as if ten giant eyes were bearing down upon him, each with the focus of a laser.
 
Chapter 22

Gyeig

Junior Trainer
Pronouns
he/him
Partners
  1. samurott

Chapter 22 - To Spot a Burned Trail​


Like rats abandoning a sinking ship, they ran. The sound of their hyperventilating and their sour stench lingered in the air they’d ran from. To think they of all Pokemon had the guts to go and rob thieves. Part of it was poetic, another was plain foolery, born from the stubbornness of one electric rodent with a chip on his shoulder. Or was it? They might have been backed into a corner, but they’d managed to subdue at least two of the thieves in the time it took for Gareda and her crew to intervene.

That split second decision Gareda had made paid off. All on the whims of her instincts, at that. One moment, she was busy with a routine checkup of some troops, to finding herself dashing through the streets and finding that one little Oshawott roaming about with that dimwitted looking lizard friend of his. He was wearing a red, woollen scarf this time. Had he been wearing that yesterday as well? Was it even the same Oshawott? Cooler minds would have said no to both. Gareda shook her head. Cooler minds were simplistic minds. It had to have been the same one. No ordinary Oshawott could send her panicking, sensory organs flaring from an otherworldly presence. There was always a bigger purpose to the way life’s threads spun. The panic happened for a reason.

“Banana beak, get over here.”

Vli hastily scooted inside the building. “Y-yes, lord Gareda?”

“Can you follow those three that left the building as long as they’re around town? If you spot anything off, tell me.”

“Yes, my lord.” Vli flapped his wings as he hopped out of the building; it was then that he took off. Gareda grumbled to herself as the Toucannon’s wingbeats steadily faded away into the background noise of Agate Township.

‘He’ll find something, alright. No ordinary Pokemon has this kind of aura.’

Sighing, the Garchomp turned her attention to the ruins she and her fellow troops were standing in. It was nothing short of a divine miracle that the destruction hadn’t spread into other buildings. “My lord, we’ve apprehended all of the lowlives running this place,” one Zeroara wearing a dark green belt reported, bearing a smile through which his upper teeth stuck out. A proud soldier in the Queen’s army, by the looks of it. Gareda tilted her head up a notch, her own upper teeth sticking out of her mouth in the same fashion.

“Good, good. You’d think thieves would have built a secret exit out of their little hideout, but tsk.” She spat a loogie out at the tied up Toxicroak laying in the corner, who had been beaten into an unconscious pulp. He was in for a rude awakening. “If they were smart, they wouldn’t be thieves.”

The Zeroara wildly brushed his arm past his chest, a complementary swing of his tail sending little sparks flying through the alcohol-ridden air. “What shall we do with ‘em? Can’t just leave ‘em sitting around here.”

Gareda tilted her head towards where the front of the store used to be. All the fighting had reduced it to splinters. “To the station, of course. Like to know what exactly they’ve been shipping their way through here. The Azure Flute could’ve been here.”

“You sure about that?” the Zeroara asked. Gareda shook her head.

“Hard to believe, isn’t it? They’re lowlives trying to swindle people for easy money. But the chance’s always there. Like finding a diamond in Luminity’s canals, sure, but it’s there.” She walked over to an overturned barrel and kicked it against the counter. “You can go get started on that now, by the way. Take the fools and drag their sorry arses to HQ. Wouldn’t even let rookies wipe my hands with ‘em.”

“Aye!”

With help from a Machoke wearing a similar green band around its chest, the Zeroara dragged the thugs off through the mud. Gareda breathed in deep. The smell when they got to the station was probably an improvement to the musk in here. Mud’s predictable. You know it’ll be bad. Slimy. Ugly. But never rancid like the wine. Never dusty like the old clothing. Never moldy like some of the foodstuffs strewn over the floor. Business hadn’t been good for the bunch. Why else would they have been stealing from a lonely little burg? If they had just picked a different hovel to raid, they’d have made off like queens. Queens of a Durant hill, but queens nonetheless.

Gareda stretched her arms out over her head, closing her eyes as let the muscles in her back and shoulders loosen up. When they opened back up, there was no one to be seen. Just the same noise from the backroom, the same sour musk of old liquids in air, and the same clutter on the ground. The Garchomp tapped her feet on the ground.

‘What is taking those idiots so long… Every second spent here is two seconds off our lives.’

While waiting on the Soldiers in the back, Gareda spent some time swiping her claws at various bits and pieces of wood that had once been part of the front wall or furniture. The scythe fins on her arms sliced through like a well sharpened axe or tusk of a Haxorus, shredding whatever remained of the wood. The lone Soldier keeping watch over what was left of the entrance went from an iron stance to caressing his spear in search of comfort. Gareda’s scowl had reemerged, and she had plenty of energy flowing through her.

‘Shouldn’t have sent the thugs off. Time’s perfect for practicing my technique, and what do I do? Get ‘em hauled off to the station. Wonderful.

Gareda raised her talons and cut through the remains of the counter, just as a figure emerged from the backroom; splinters flew past the fiery figure, who jumped back bearing a shocked look.

“Aah!”

The sensors on Gareda’s head vibrated. She lifted her striking arm up from the ground, and composed herself. “There you are. What took you so long?”

The figure cautiously stepped back into the room bearing a nervous smile. One meeting of the eyes confirmed what Gareda’s sensors had already picked up on: A Magmar. “There was a basement to go through, my Lord. Quite a lot of other junk in there.”

Gareda raised an eye as she wiped her arms of any wood chippings that might have landed on them. “Well, Luffy? Did you find anything down there?”

The Magmar shook her head. “We’re going to have to check the place more thoroughly, but no sign of anything peculiar down there. Typical thieving stuff, really.”

“No sign of the flute?”

“Nothing. No notes or messages or anything of the sort.”

With a scowl, Gareda spread her arms wide and cracked the muscles in both. “Looks like we have some interrogating to do, then. I don’t buy for a single second that these thieves have seen none of what we’re looking for.”

Luffy smacked her lips. “What makes you say that? They’re just thieves.”

Gareda replied with a dull groan. She swung her tail around as she turned back to face her guard. “Just thieves, you say. Pfft. Nothing in this world is it’s own contained thing. Every action always has a reaction somewhere, whether you believe it or not,” she said as she approached Luffy and caressed the side of her shoulder with a fin on one of her arms. Luffy’s body vibrated; the flame at the tip of her tail grew a little taller. “Our job is to find out just how far this web spreads. We might not find the flute connected to the web. But we may find a thread that leads to the flute. Any guesses on what?”

“I… I have no idea,” Luffy stammered. “This is kind of confusing.”

The Garchomp rolled her eyes. ‘And this is the best Patrina’s given me. Arceus, have mercy on my soul.’ “What I mean is, we may find potential partners of theirs who may know more. About who took the flute piece.”

Luffy shrugged. “That I don’t know. All these guys were selling appears to all be stolen.”

“Do you have any better ideas?” Gareda asked.

“Not really.”

“Then just do as I say. It’s the best bet we’ve got. Now then, come down to the station with me. You and I are going to get those fools to talk.”

“R-really?” Luffy said, sounding pleasantly surprised. Gareda grunted at her from the entrance. She was already on her way there. Luffy exhaled and ran right after her.

* * *​

Mud splattered all over their feet as they ran across the town. Tired as they were from escaping by the skin of their teeth, they had to run. With the dreadful state of the roads, it was a slog. One would have just as good of a time trying to run with an anchor tied around their waist. George started panting only a street away from the marketplace. He may as well have had an anchor tied around him. His body sure felt like one was.

Their run wasn’t going unnoticed, either. From Soldiers to pedestrians, a whole bunch of eyes were directed nowhere else but the strangers from a town next door. Some were annoyed, others were eerily looking at their scarves. Even the postbirds above weren’t keen on their presence. As if the whole town were nudging the three of them in their backs, steadily shoving them further towards the moat to make them take a dive and sleep with the Tentacruel.

Despite protests from Blitzer, Speedy wouldn’t stop until they had gotten out of the town in one piece. After an exhaustive run ripe with hostility from the locals, the three ran out of the town and back over the hill. The guards were either slacking off or didn’t care enough to try and stop them from leaving unchecked. Neither Speedy, George or Blitzer were in the mood to find out. Better to not know how it feels to have the tip of a spear pressed against your back.

Over the hill, the run gradually declined into a stumble, ending with a drop to the knees in Speedy’s case, and a belly flop for the other two. Blitzer landed with his tail curled up and touching his back, while George’s chest ended up pressing into the back of his scalchop, which got a wince out of him. Ears flat and teeth gritted, his hand unclenched from his scalchop, causing the badge he’d sandwiched in between one of the folds to roll off over the ground.

“Aargh.. Hey! Careful with that!”

Speedy jumped back to his feet and leapt at the badge before it rolled off into the green. “Didn’t come this far just to lose it out here, heheh.”

George looked up with a faceful of sand spread over his cheeks. “All of this just for a piece of metal?” he said, staring in disbelief at Speedy as he held the badge out in front of his face, positively beaming with confidence.

“It’s no mere piece of metal, lad. This is an important family heirloom of mine! Have had it for years, and it’s my most prized possession. Can’t believe I let those thieves snatch it in the middle of the night, just like that.”

Blitzer rolled onto his side with a groan. “How come they stole it to begin with? How could they just do that to you?” he said, dusting off his arms. “If I had something from my old father and someone tried to steal it, I’d turn them into ash!”

A soft grumble stirred in Blitzer’s throat. Speedy nervously chuckled. “Well, ehh, I had it perched on a dresser, heh.”

“You just had it out in the open?” George asked as he got back up.

“Pretty much.” Speedy scratched himself behind the ear. George couldn’t get his eyes to open past the halfway point after hearing him. ‘What a klutz.’

“I know, silly of me. I’ll do better from now on, though,” Speedy replied with a cheery smile, which vanished as the dirt in front of him suddenly crunched hard.

“That’s ridiculous! No one can just take something like that without any consequences!” Blitzer shouted, fists clenched and his tail sparking with a volcanic intensity that spooked George’s eyes open. “We should have broken that whole shop of theirs down!”

“Hey now, lad, don’t be upset for me. I’ve got my badge back, and that’s what counts,” Speedy said, gesturing with his front paws to try and get Blitzer to settle down.

“What do you mean, don’t be upset? They robbed you of your most important treasure! Took it right from you and wanted to sell it!” Blitzer shouted. “How could you be so laid back about it? I would burn a whole forest down to get anything reminding me of my old pops! Anything!!”

Blitzer spoke with a Charmeleon-like snarl. Harsh on the ear wouldn’t even begin to describe it. Both Speedy and George were on the backfoot, trying to put some distance in between themselves and Blitzer, lest they’d fall victim to an uncontrolled Flamethrower which, given the crackling sounds coming from behind the Charmander, were not going to stop at a layer of black soot.

“C-come on now, buddy, calm down!” Speedy said with a raised voice and a complementary spark. “You don’t want to end up like those folks we’ve just dealt with, do you?”

“Of course not!” Blitzer shouted. “But I can’t just let them get away with this! I wish I had something like you, something that reminds me of my old pops and moms. Anything!!”

George tried to approach Blitzer with his scalchop in hand. “Blitzer, don’t get upset over-”

“NO! You don’t understand!” Blitzer shouted back. George shrank back, shaking intensely as he watched the Pokemon he trusted more than any other fall deeper and deeper into a drunken rage. Fists clenched, teeth bared, ragged heaves passing back and forth through his snout; George could count his lucky stars that the two of them weren’t enemies.

‘What’s gotten into you, Blitzer? Why are you getting angry at me?’

“Lad, come on now. This is getting out of hand.”

“You don’t understand!! Why can’t you just-”

A loud spark stopped Blitzer’s voice dead in its tracks. Violent as it may look, there was a certain calm to Speedy’s demeanour, unlike the visible rage flowing off Blitzer. Without words, he gave off a simple message. ‘I am in control.’

“Listen, you. Growing up, I had a whole lotta friends who started off like you did. Angry, overly passionate, maybe even out to prove something. But lemme tell you something, lad. They all ended up diving deep into thievery and all sorts of other nastiness. That’s what happens when you have no morals or standards whatsoever. You’ll accept anything that happens as long as you think you’ll be gettin’ something out of it.”

Blitzer’s demeanour cooled off in the blink of an eye. “What? No, that’s not me, I would never-”

Speedy laid a paw on the Charmander’s neck. “Right now, yes. But so many of my friends were like that, too. All high and mighty now, but give it time and you’ll see how deep they sink. Fights one day, stealing the next, so on. At the rate they went, they’re probably cutting a deal with Giratina right this second,” he said, frowning. “So don’t tell me you got yourself under control here. Eventually, you’ll slip. Happens quicker than you may think.”

The energy was sucked right out of Blitzer’s body; he fell back to his regular composure, from teeth to tail. “If you say so… I don’t know what you mean with Giratina-”

“You don’t want to know.” Speedy shook his head. “You don’t want to know.”

Blitzer sighed. “Forget I ever said anything, okay-”

Speedy seized Blitzer’s chin with a paw. “Not so fast. That little outburst of yours has got that friend of yours all messed up. Have a look, will ya?” he said, before forcing Blitzer to look George straight in the eye. George was visibly shaken by the outburst. No longer was he smiling or bored, curious or unimpressed; those emotions had all left his eyes, and what was left was a shivering husk trapped in a snowstorm. A gasp escaped Blitzer’s throat.

“G-George? What’s wrong?” he asked. George couldn’t answer him with anything besides further frowning and uncomfortable shifting of his feet.

‘I, I don’t get it. Why did he act out like that? It’s just like him… He acted that way too.’

“George…?”

“That’s your doing, lad.”

Blitzer stared on hopelessly at the little otter shivering before him. The anger of others is never easy to deal with, not for George. It was troubling and frightening as was when he was surrounded by no one but humans; but Pokemon were a step above even that. Fury backed up by terrifying displays of power. Raging infernos, uncontrollable storms, nightmares and so much more. They were creatures of incredible power that no mere man was meant to wield. No human could ever conceive of it, not without a technological miracle at their side. Blitzer wouldn’t fully understand what it was like. He never knew anything different, after all.

“You should go and apologise. That friend of yours needs it.”

“But I didn’t mean to hurt him.”

“And that’s what you just did. What’s done can’t be undone, remember?”

“Yeah,” Blitzer chirped in a dull tone. By now, George was looking away towards the fields. “Look, I’m sorry about all of that. Okay? I didn’t mean anything to you. Truly.”

Blitzer’s stammering fell on deaf ears. George found greater comfort staring at the Pidoves flocking away in the distance.

‘If this is how he treats me now, what’ll happen when things get worse? I don’t know how it’ll be worse, just in general, will he even see me as a friend still? Or would he just burn me?’

“Please George, I’m telling you,” Blitzer continued to stammer. “I didn’t try to hurt you! I mean it! I really do!” he said, stamping his foot in the ground. Crunching sounds were coming up the hill. “Why can’t you-”

“Everything alright over here, citizens?”

The two of them jumped as a strange voice addressed them. All eyes went in the direction of Agate Township, where a Vigoroth with a thick green chest piece bearing the Vined Crest stood, tapping his claws into the dirt.

“N-no, I mean yes, I, uh, I was just uh, telling my friend over here that um,” Blitzer immediately blurted out, “I was just telling him that uh, that I had the embers, and uh, I didn’t mean to uh, scorch him when I sneezed. That’s all, heheh…”

The Vigoroth soldier folded her arms. “I’m not convinced. You were screaming just now. We heard it back at the gate. What is going on here?”

“Oh, uh, n-no-” Blitzer stopped to swallow a large buildup of saliva. The tip of his tail twitched back and forth. George inched away from him. Were it not for a sigh from Speedy, they’d both be lost.

“Lemme explain for him. The lil’ Charmander lad got all angry that we didn’t go and get something he wanted, so he started sparkin’ and sputtering, that sort of thing. Typical Charmander stuff, really.”

The soldier spat beside herself. “Typical Charmander indeed. Watch yourself, laddie .Not everyone’s as accepting of your crap,” she said, before turning back the way she came, leaving a scent of dirty fur in her wake. Once her footsteps had dimmed enough, Speedy shuffled his way to their sides and dragged them both with him along the trail.

“That was pathetic, lad.”

“Wh-what do you mean, pathetic?”

“Almost got us dragged back for interrogating. And that’s beside the point. That apology sucked.”

“I’m trying, okay?” Blitzer said with his hands out in front of him. Speedy suddenly raised the tip of his tail, and struck Blitzer on the side of his head. “Ow!”

“Not good enough, lad. Some apology that was. Didn’t even sound like you cared.”

“I do care!”

Speedy then shoved both Blitzer and George forward. “Then do it properly. Do explain why you got all upset over somethin’ that’s not even yours.”

Blitzer and George looked each other straight in the eye. A cold wind blew overhead as both were silent for a long while. Blitzer played with his fingers, making chirping sounds as if a few words were itching in the back of his throat, but he couldn’t bring himself to say them. George on the other hand was standing all statuelike, his arms congruent with the rest of his body. Were it not for one lip being buckled inwards because of a tooth pressing on it, he looked as if he were about to start crying.

A foot tapped into the dirt beside them. Blitzer’s first instinct was to look, but he didn’t follow through, and instead sighed. “Alright. George, I don’t know if you’ll believe me, but… I didn’t mean to get that annoyed. Or angry. It wasn’t right, and you shouldn’t have seen that. And Speedy shouldn’t have either. I feel horrible about it.”

George’s tail tapped into the dirt with the strength of a leaf falling from a tree. “But why did you get upset at all? You’re never like that, I don’t understand.”

Blitzer hummed as his eyes wandered off to a critter moving around behind George. “It… It just wasn’t the right time. You know there’s myths and all about how the stars align? Well, my stars aligned. When Speedy told me about his treasure getting stolen like that, and how it reminds him of family, I couldn’t take it. I don’t have anything like that of my own parents. My actual parents… I know how much Nero and Nera care about me, and I love them, but I miss my old pops and moms. I really do. All I have of them is memories.” He lowered his head. “I don’t want to lose that too.”

George’s gaze was lowered to the dirt under their feet as well. Once upon a time, the headmistress had told him that the past isn’t worth considering, and that the now was all one needed. Partially, he could agree. Being rid of her and the others was an offer that felt impossible to refuse. And yet he couldn’t do it. Not even if there was a button that magically wiped his mind of any trace of who they were. Even a past as awful as his own, he’d stick with it. Blitzer had far more pleasant times bottled up inside of him. They guided him. They motivated him. Those memories were always in the back of his mind, encouraging him to move forward. It’s no wonder why the idea of losing something so cherished caused him to lash out. George felt unwell.

“I understand, Blitzer.”

A light smile crept onto Blitzer’s face. “I’m glad you do. But still, I’m sorry about all of that. I should’ve controlled myself better.”

Their eyes met each other once again. George’s doubts had simmered back down. One last thing was sticking to his chest, which he wanted to break free from.
“I’m glad you’re still you in the end.”

Blitzer’s lips curled up. “What do you mean?”

George gently nodded at him. ‘No turning back now. But that’s not so bad.’

“Just now, you reminded me of a kid who lived in the foster’s home with me. His name was Wesley. He’d always blow up at me and other kids when we least expected it. All that was separating you two is that he would always fight you over it, too.”

Blitzer’s tail swayed around like a whip. “That’s terrible! Did he hit hard?”

George hummed in agreement. “If not for the… you know, I would show you the bruises,” he said, keeping the corner of one eye trained on Speedy who was contently watching them a few steps away.

“Oh…”

“It’s nothing. It didn’t come to that, did it?”

“Yeah.”

“And I’ll probably never see Wesley again, so all’s well.” George chuckled. A paw then touched him on the back of the neck; the breath shot out of his lungs.

“Seems like you two lads have it all sorted out, don't you?” Speedy said.

“Uh, yeah, we sure do,” Blitzer said, awkwardly laughing. The Raichu patted them both on their backs, smiling.

“That’s great, lads. See, it wasn’t such a big deal after all, eh? You shouldn’t get so upset over these things, it just ain’t worth it. Compared to the stuff that’s out there, this is small beans, let me tell ya!”

With a laugh, Speedy took his hands back. The copper badge that had caused all this drama to begin with was sticking out in between a fold in his scarf. George thumbed his nose. A strange hint of ash came off it. It was difficult to tell underneath the metal, but his nose wasn’t lying.

“So uh, that badge of yours, where’s it from?” George asked. Speedy took the badge into one paw and gave it a glance.

“This, lad, is an old heirloom of mine, much like I said.” Speedy quickly looked over his shoulder; no one in sight. A bird's wings beat into the wind not far from them. “‘S got more than just sentimental value to me, I might need it again one day.”

“For what?” Blitzer asked.

“To identify myself to some old friends, that’s what. We all have a badge like this one. If I ever see them again, and I can’t distinguish myself from any other nosey Raichu, well then I’ll be paddlin’ up the creek without a paddle!” Speedy said.

George wiped at his brow. He felt relieved, somehow. Not that there was anything in particular to be relieved over, it was calm. And that’s what counted.

“Well, do you think you’ll see those friends anytime soon?”

Speedy folded his arms. “Well, ‘s a difficult one, lad. Could happen today. Maybe a year. We could be waiting for a long time, you know. That’s just the way life goes,” he said, swinging the bolt on the end of tail around. A cat would’ve loved it. Speedy wouldn’t like the cat so much, though. George chuckled to himself.

“Eh?” Speedy blurted out.

“Oh, it’s nothing,” George said in between laughs.

“Hey, it’s the truth, I tell you! Can’t help it.”

“Hey, are we waiting on something too?” Blitzer then asked.

“What do you mean?” said Speedy as he put the badge back in the fold he’d taken it out of. A cold wind blew at his back.

“Well, you said ‘we’, so I’m just wondering if…” Blitzer didn’t know how to finish his sentence. A few seconds after the last word and a dull hum from Blitzer, Speedy clicked his tongue and sniffed the air a few times.

“Who knows? Every day’s a chance for something new, am I right? We’ll just have to wait ‘n see tomorrow. Speaking of tomorrow, it’s getting late already. Huh.”

Following Speedy’s gesture, George shielded his eyes as he looked towards the sky. He wasn’t entirely wrong, but it was a stretch to call him right, either. The sun had just hit the halfway point. Plenty of daylight to get back. Then again, every second they weren’t home wasn’t going to do them any favours when they got back. It was nothing short of a miracle neither of them had any bruises or other injuries.

“We should be going home, then. Your parents won’t accept another excuse for it, will they?”

Blitzer shook his head. “Not in a million years.”

“Alright then lads, let’s get going, then. You did well today! I’m proud of you both.”

“Thanks!”

With another gust of wind hitting their backs, the three of them headed back over the road towards Greenfield. As they left, a bird took off from a nearby tree; it was headed straight for Agate Township.

“Is that what I think it is…? Arceus almighty, Lord Gareda needs to know this.”
 
Chapter 23

Gyeig

Junior Trainer
Pronouns
he/him
Partners
  1. samurott

Chapter 23 - A Not So Warm Welcome​


Earlier that morning, when they had a foot out the door, George and Blitzer had been explicitly warned. ‘Don’t come back like you did three days ago!’ The closer they got to the village, the louder that statement rang through their heads. Each change in scenery, from plain to forest to bog, someone turned up the volume of that statement. Couldn’t get away from it. Didn’t matter how much any of the three complimented another on their fighting ability, talked about a Pokemon or group of Pokemon they spotted off road, Nero and Nera’s words strained the mind. Not even a swarm of Combee descending upon a poor Beedrill got rid of it.

No surprise then that when they entered the village, and then stepped into the square, then went on the last crossroad between the road leading to the hovel and the path leading over the stream, their moods swung sour. The skies had taken on an orange tint, and a good chunk of the village had already headed home. Given the clouds moving in opposite of the sun, that was for the better.

“Well kids, thanks again for everything. I’ll knock on your door again some time tomorrow. You know, just makin’ sure those two Poisoners haven’t locked you up for weeks. Wouldn’t sit right with me, ya know!” Speedy poked Blitzer in the chest with an elbow. The gesture didn’t go over well: Blitzer pushed Speedy’s arm away.

“We’ve been away for a long time, though. If my parents find so much as a single scratch on me, we’re finished,” the Charmander said, cradling his tail. “What if they still won’t let us out even if you do take the blame for everything?”

Speedy twirled his ears upwards. “Heh. Don’t you worry about that, lad. They can’t ground me! I’ll be their problem until they change their minds, promise.”

George patted himself on the nose. “What about Junior, though? You still have him to watch over,” he said, then licked his upper lip. ‘Or better yet, what if another group of thieves comes along to steal his badge. Once bitten, twice shy, right?’

“Junior can handle himself. That little lad’s none of my concern. In fact, biggest concern I have is that you two kids can’t go and be kids with him! Lad needs some more action in his life, and you two are perfect for that.”

George scratched his head. “Thanks, I guess.” ‘I thought parents weren’t supposed to be that laid back about their kids. Different world, different species, I guess.’

“We should get going now, before my parents want to barricade me in my room,” Blitzer said.

“Yeah, I was about to send you two off anyway. I got a kid that needs dinner. And I’m sure you two do as well.”

“Oh yes,” Blitzer chirped, patting his cream colored tummy with a claw. “I haven’t eaten anything since the morning.” Gradually, a frown crept onto his snout. “We should have gotten something to eat in Agate Township.”

George crossed his arms over his scalchop. “I’d prefer going hungry to that, to be honest.”
“Why, George?”

“Do you trust any of those people to give you good food?” George asked Blitzer, whose tongue slid between his lips.

“Well it was worth a try, right? We could’ve gone inside of that… what was it called? Roark’s Cafe-”

“Nope! Nope, the Oshawott lad has the right idea, Blitzer. Too expensive! I’ve been to placed like that myself, before, and yes, heheh, it uh, it was an expensive stay,” Speedy said while pinching his cheeks in an attempt to bury an awkward grin. “Anyway, let’s not stand around here too much longer, yes? Get yourselves some rest, you deserve it lads.”

“Okay?” Blitzer said, dumbfounded. George clicked his tongue. Better not to question someone with more world experience.

* * *​

“Took you two long enough to get back.”

“Dad, I told you, Speedy needed to get some stuff from Agate Township, and that’s pretty far.”

“Not that far, is it?”

“Yes mom, it is! More than an hour to get there, at least! And we had to carry stuff back home after he was done buying what he needed, which took a long time.”

Steam curled up from the stew underneath George’s nose. Hints of some sort of meat were clearly present in the mixture; it smelled too appetising for it to be more of that vegetable gunk Nera had served a few days ago. Where the meat came from, only Arceus knew. George wasn’t energised enough to delve into the rabbit hole of what Pokemon the meat came from. As long as it wasn’t one of the townsfolk he was about to stuff into his mouth, that’s all he cared about. Pokemon weren’t humans at the end of the day. Their idea of what was ethical wouldn’t be the same. For all he knew, he was biting into wild Nidorino, or Nidorina. Or Charmander.

Not that thinking this through mattered, given that George’s appetite was being ruined enough as was by Nero and Nera deciding dinner time would be a fine time to start an argument with Blitzer. At times it felt like he was sitting at the table with two detectives who were trying to get him and his partner in crime to spill the beans. Blitzer played coy for a while, but even he had enough of explaining the exact same things over and over at a certain point. He resorted to dirty looks and swinging his tail around, much to the chagrin of Nero who was anxiously watching the flame at the tip whish by a stump of wood.

“Hey there, watch it! You’ll burn the whole house down, mister!”

Blitzer crossed his arms. “Why don’t you believe us, then? We’re not lying!”

“Blitzer, honey, we do believe you,” Nera said.

“No you don’t!”

“We do, we’re just concerned something might have happened. Agate Township is a rough place. Even a strong Pokemon like you can get seriously hurt if you don’t watch out.”

“But we didn’t get hurt! Can’t we just eat?”

“As long as you calm down, you,” Nero grumbled. “Can’t even ask my own kid questions anymore. Knew you’d get moody at some point, but Arceus almighty…”

“Moody? What are you talking about?” Blitzer churred. Nero flicked his ears backwards.

“That middle ground between kid and adult, lad. Everyone deals with it at some point. You’ve just hit it.”

“Let’s not talk about this today, shall we? The stew is getting cold,” Nera said, drumming a forepaw onto the table.

George stretched his arms over his head. ‘Finally, they’re done,’ he thought to himself. A soft groan from his stomach made him leer into the soup. Saliva began to accumulate under his tongue. Holding a spoon in his hand, it was time to eat. The day had been too long as was.

When they were done eating, it had already become dark outside. A chill crept into the hovel. Much to Blitzer and George’s protests, however, the parents forced them to go and bathe.

“It’s cold! I don’t want to go and bathe!”

“Too bad, Blitzer. You stink.”

“No I don’t.”

“Yes you do. Quit whining.”

“How many times have I told you? I don’t like water, it makes me feel all cramped.”

“Too bad. I don’t like water either. But guess what? I’m not letting you stink the house up with that musk of yours.”

“Ugh…”

One cold rinse later, the two were allowed to go to their room. Blitzer was groaning and scratching wildly at his belly and his legs, while George had a slight smile on his face. If it wasn’t so cold, then bathing wouldn’t be a problem. Bathing made him happy. It was instinctual. Oshawotts liked being around water. Their bodies were made for it.

After messing around with some toys, the two went to sleep. Who knew what tomorrow would bring.

* * *​

Sunshine awaited them the next day. On their way out, Nero and Nera had given them the same lecture on not straying too far from the village, which they carelessly nodded their heads to, George keeping his fingers crossed all the while. How fortunate that Pokemon did not know what human gestures meant.

“Uargh, I’ve been dying to get outside today! I’ve got a headache,” Blitzer chirped, one hand rubbing his shiny head.

George yawned as they walked the path leading downwards.“You too?”

“Yeah. It just kind of started right as I rolled out of bed.”

“Did the flute get into your nest overnight?” said George, thumbing his nose. Blitzer chuckled back at him along with an excited flicker from his tail.

“Well it sure would explain a lot!” the Charmander chirped, once again rubbing his head. “This is real annoying, though. It feels like someone hit me over the head with a log. Something like that. Or that something is sticking out of my head.”

“Odd,” George replied. A headache wasn’t the only thing that was off. Blitzer was walking rather funny, as if his legs were stretched and out of proportion. It looked like he could fall right over if he so much as kicked a pebble by accident. George kept paying attention to it every now and then. If he had to guess, it was either a growth spurt, or early morning grogginess not having worn off yet.

Bltzer’s erratic movement didn’t wear off when they met up with the other kids and started messing around with them. He was slow in tag, wasn’t quite as agile as he used to be with jumping on rocks, and panted a lot easier than on any day prior. Despite this, and even with a lot of the other kids asking him if he was okay, Blitzer insinuated that he felt fine, chalking it all up to a bad day. He wasn’t about to let his little difficulties get in the way of himself. That was for sure.

Once the fun and games died down, they all sat down by the stream, everyone except Corst and Blitzer dipping their feet into the water. Corst fidgeted around with his rocky helmet, his panting echoing underneath.

“Boy, it sure is hot today, isn’t it?”

“Tell me about it. I’ve been wanting to jump into the water for an hour now, but my parents would slap me silly if they found out! All because the water smells bad when it's in my fur.” Sweitelle said, kicking her feet around in the water.

“You have your feet in the water now though, don’t you?” asked George, who was sitting next to her.

“That’s different,” Sweitelle said. The Pikachu sitting to her left shook his head.

“Your parents are crazy. My dad would never put a silly restriction on me like that. What do they care? It’s hot! And you’re of water, too!”

Sweitelle sighed. “That’s just the way they are, I guess…”

The others all frowned. The sun wasn’t being kind on them, given the panting sounds in the air. George took a glance at the water and had an idea. “Well, since your feet are already wet, can’t you just run through the water? In fact, why don’t we all just do that?”

“Please no, I don’t want to make it any worse than it already is.”

“Well, I’ll go anyway. It’s too hot, darn it.” George jumped to his feet. “I don’t care if the water smells!”

“George, be careful! The current is a lot stronger than you think-” Junior warned, to no avail; George had already hopped into the widest part of the stream he could find, flashing a smile as he hopped through to the other side. The water felt incredibly refreshing to the touch. A wave of calmness went over him as droplets spattered around everywhere. Without a care in the world, he ran up the other side of the stream, right onto a portion of road. Just in time to hit the large figure standing on said road.

“Oof!”

He slammed head first into what felt like a large ball of vines, which he bounced ht off, causing him to tip over backwards onto his rear.

“Oh, my! Watch out there, laddie!”

Eyes now open and paying attention, George found himself looking up at a large fellow covered in all too familiar blue tendrils, who was looking at him with great curiosity.

“Wait, you again?”

“Ah yes! You are Jor-je, right? I’ve been looking for you! I must say, this is not how I intended to introduce myself, but here I am anyway” the Tangrowth postman said, making thumping noises with his right arm; slung around that side of his body was a large bag made out of material that resembled linen.

“Hey, it’s you!” Blitzer chirped from over the stream.

“That’s right, it’s me alright! The postman! Oh, uh, I’m not really that important. Just an honest postman doing his job, that’s all,” the Tangrowth said with a soft, heavy chuckle. You could hear the weight of the tendrils in his voice.

Tail swaying back and forth with enough force to get a few yelps out of the others, Blitzer stumbled his way over the stream, snout hanging halfway open from what George assumed were a dozen questions itching in the back of his throat. The postman reflexively took a step back; his eyes were drawn to the flame being swung back and forth.

“More news? More news?”

“Well yes, there is always new news, except for the times when there’s nothing new.”

“What about us?” Blitzer tilted his head sideways.

“That’s why I’m here!” The postman exclaimed, pointing both his large tendril arms at a spot just under his eyes. “I am indeed here to hand you something new, yes. Well uh, no, that’s not entirely correct, I’m not allowed to hand over post to kids myself. I gave it to the friendly ghost man running the café. Now then, since you managed to get your hands on the last bit of news from there, I’m sure you’ll have no issues doing so again this time. Correct?”

George and Blitzer both sucked in a breath between their teeth, tepidly nodding towards the postman with about as much conviction as someone whose hands had been in the cookie jar.

“Oh yes, he uh, he did give us the message, yes,” Blitzer said, pinching his sides.

“Yes, what he said,” George said right after, pointing a finger in the wrong direction. ‘Well, it was less giving us the massage, and more having the message shoved into my face, then getting kicked out, but it’s not wrong, I guess.’

“Good, good!” the Tangrowth cheerily said, rubbing his arms together and jingling the other tendrils covering his body around. “So then, are there any other questions that need answering? I uh, I am a bit busy today. Big workload and all! A lot of post to be delivered, I’m afraid.”

“Is this related to the last message?” Blitzer asked.

“Ah yes, it most certainly is,” the postman said with a few nods in rapid succession. “The ghost man told me himself. ‘It took long enough for this to come in, I have been rotting waiting for this’, that’s what he said, word for word! I don’t know what he means with rotting, but there you have it.”

“Oh, okay,” Blitzer said. George pressed his tongue against the side of his cheek.

‘Oh boy, this will be a world of fun, won’t it?’

“Now then, kids, any other questions, or is this enough information?”

“Well, I don’t think there’s any other information to be gotten, we just have to go in there now,” George said. His ears poked up from Blitzer breathing in right next to him; no words followed.

“Good, good, then I will get going again. Have a good day, fellow kids!”

With a nod, a wave, a stumble, a laugh and slap in his own face, the Tangrowth stomped off. George breathed out.

‘Well, that just happened.’

The other kids came running over the stream, the splashing causing George and Blitzer to turn on the balls of their feet. “Hey, it was that Tangrowth again. What was that all about?” Junior asked, to which Blitzer shrugged.

“Änother message for us. That’s it.”

“What’s in it?”

Blitzer shook his head. “I don’t know, we have to go and pick it up from café like last time.”

Junior frowned. “The café? You mean from that creepy ghost?”

George hummed a dull note. “Yeah, we do. I don’t like it either.”

Corst clubbed the ground with a stick he’d found. “I know who you mean! I’ll tell you what, that ghost is a big jerk! I still remember one day, where I was all by myself, playing with a ball, and it rolled into his yard, okay? Totally by accident, yet he comes out shaking that big fist, telling me to pick it up all angrily.”

Sighing, Blitzer turned his back to the others. “Alright then… George, let’s just get this done and over with. The sooner we’re there, the sooner we’re done.” George shook his head and followed in his footsteps.

“Yeah, sure.”

“What about us?”

“We’ll explain the rest later.”

* * *​

From the moment the first strum from the guitar reached their ears, and the murky air hanging inside of the café filled up their nostrils with the stench of old juice, it was clear they were in for a treat. There was no guard stopping them, like last time. George’s eyes panned from wall to floor. All that was missing now was the inevitable moment when Hein would pop out, press his hands into their backs, and scold them silly. Any second now. The spectral echo of his voice would hit them square in the ear. They treaded with light feet. Any second now. They got past the curve hiding the rest of the café from the entrance. Any second now. They got to the bar. Blitzer and George, who had their hands raised and had walked so gently that none of the wooden floor boards had creaked thus far, put their hands back down.

“Where is he?”

“I don’t know, in that back room, maybe?”

“But then he wouldn’t be able to see who was coming in, could he?”

“Will you two kids shut up back there? You’re not even supposed to be in here!” a patron two tables over yelled at the two, juice leaking out of their maw and onto their fur.

“S-sorry!” A spooked Blitzer meeped back at him. “We’re only here for a letter.”

“They don’t deliver letters here, kid! Are you stupid?”

Blitzer almost choked on the saliva he audibly swallowed. The patron was looking at them like their very presence in the café was an insult. An insult that didn’t warrant any other response other than a beatdown. Those feline eyes were filled to the brim with the fury to give them just that. George tried reaching for his scalchop, only to find it already in his hands. Said hands didn’t need to wait for George’s mind to catch up, not in times like these. It hadn’t come to blows yet, though, and surely the people of Greenfield wouldn’t ever resort to violence against someone that was barely a teenager, would they? That was George’s hope.

“Excuse me sir, but we won’t be here for very long. Only one or two minutes at best, we just need to see the café owner-”

“Get outta ‘ere, you!!” the patron roared back. George and Blitzer, now shaking and jittering, fell backwards into a pair of waiting hands. Soft, cold. That’s what pressed against their backs. That’s all they needed to know.

“Shut it.”

Echoes rang through the café, silencing the guitar and the others present, who were merely enjoying a chat over a cup of berry juice. A spectral presence manifested behind the two. Their legs shook like branches in an ominous wind.

“Shout at my guests again, and forget about your liver inevitably giving up. I’ll drop you off in the afterlife myself.”

The patron in Hein’s crosshairs growled back at him, visible electric sparks jolting from his fangs. The Dusknoir took his hand from George’s back and stretched his arm out at the patron. A peculiar feeling shot through George’s body, starting from the print of Hein’s touch. Wide eyed and confused, he looked behind him to see the ghost’s lone eye taking on a sinister glow. Something flew over George’s head. It couldn’t be seen, but it was there. A gasp rang through the air; the skin under the patron’s fur looked as if it was being pushed off their body. Foam emerged in place of the sparks, as the patron fell out of his chair, wildly flailing his limbs around as the others in the cafe watched on in horror. Any hint of coziness in the air had been sucked out of the building.

“What an idiot.” Hein reached onto George’s back, only to immediately pull his hand back away. “Huh. Well now.”

“Wh-what are you doing?” George asked.

“Nothing, kiddo. Just an itch. You have those too, don’t you?”

George gritted his teeth. The very thought of having to look the ghost behind his back in the eye was painful. Not one drop of blood inside his body wasn’t running cold. If only he had Blitzer right by his side, he wouldn’t feel so powerless. More than a bug. Maybe comfortable enough to address the ghost as if he wasn’t capable of breaking their spirit with a flick of his fingers. Alas, Blitzer was too busy shaking in the grasp of Hein’s other hand, too terrified to even speak. “Y-yes sir.”

“Indeed.” Hein patted him on the shoulder, then turned his eye and antenna towards the rest of the room. “My apologies, everyone. Please get back to what you were doing. I will be busy with these two clowns for a little while, then I’ll clean up the mess. Patience, if you may.”

The strumming of the guitar started back up as the two were led into the back room from the last time. George was dead silent, staring straight in front of him as an unseen force pushed him and Blitzer away. Blitzer wasn’t taking it well. Softly whimpering as he was being led away, starstruck by what his two eyes had seen. He was all alone. George couldn’t slide a hand over to comfort him: His limbs barely budged from his own commands. The unseen force had locked him out.

“What are-” George felt a cold tug on his lips. Next thing he knew, they had dried out and practically molded together. They too stopped responding.

“Quiet. You’re annoying my guests.”

The whines and whimpers became louder. Hein didn’t silence them. Instead, he pushed the palms of his hands into the backs they were holding. All the hairs on George’s back flew up straight from a cold wave of static as he staggered onto a mat. There, his knees gave way, and he dropped onto them. Blitzer fell on his one mat over, right next to the entrance, hyperventilating and shivering all the while. The mark of that palm would not go away anytime soon. Not for George, and least of all for Blitzer. George took one good look at him. No words he could say could describe what Blitzer had to be feeling. Hein’s touch had been cruel, and colder than a black heart. George slapped the ground with his tail. It was like he had a sudden wish for death.

“What’s wrong with you?!”

“Excuse me, what was that?” Hein cupped a hand around the tip of his antenna.

“I said, what’s wrong with you? What did you do to that Pokemon in the café just now? Why did you just drag us in here?” George yelled back. The Dusknoir wasn’t impressed. George steeled his nerves, anticipating that he was about to become the victim of another reprisal. Ghosts were not to be taken lightly, not one bit. But the anger inside of him overruled any sense of self preservation. Even if it wasn’t going to end well, he had to do something.

The Dusknoir scoffed, seeing the little Oshawott standing on the mat with his fists clenched. “Feisty today, aren’t we?”

“I’m not letting you hurt us anymore,” George groaned.

The lone eyeball rolled around. “As if I’d even consider that.”

“You just did! Look! Look at what you’ve done to my friend!”

“Wasn’t me that scared him. He scared himself. Some Char he is, can’t even look a fat bastard like me in the eye,” Hein chuckled.

“Why you…!” George softly groaned through his teeth. Hein poked a pinky finger out him. A ghastly force compelled him to sit back down, and forget any hostile thoughts he might have had.

“Listen to me you chippy idiot. I don’t go out of my way to hurt my business. Maybe you’ll understand this once you lose the freckles, but I like to keep a clean house. No drunkards, no weirdos, no hawkers, et cetera. So, if you’d please be patient, I’ll hand you your damn letter, and we can go back to pretending we never met. Is that clear?”

Hein leaned over until his eye was directly over George’s head. George remained silent for a few seconds, keeping a cards player’s stare onto his face in spite of the giant mouth hovering inches away from him. A cold wind blew up against his feet; his ears were flat, vibrating as they listened to the hollow moans pouring out of Blitzer’s mouth.

“Clear.”

“Good.” A piece of paper was pressed into George’s hand. “Here’s your damn message. You still have the flute piece, don’t you?”

“Yes,” George said with a slight nod.

Hein spread his arms wide and clapped. The sound was very dull. Something akin to a dusty book being dropped onto the floor. “So you aren’t entirely useless after all, congratulations.”

George swallowed a glob of saliva. “Thanks, I guess.”

“Enough of this jabber. You can read it back later, but to make a long story short, you need to take that flute piece to the center of Greenwood Forest. There, in the center of the Mystery Dungeon is a tree stump in a field. Put the flute down there, and get back out. Clear?”

“...sure.”

“Good. Now then, piss off you two.”

Hein watched on as George got off his feet, then helped his still mortified friend off the mat, dragging him out of the room. Blitzer gladly accepted his hands around his arm. More so than even a cripple would. Hein shook his antenna around as they disappeared from his café, pressing the palm of his hand against his lone eye.

“And this is who Terez is putting all her hopes into…”
 
Chapter 24

Gyeig

Junior Trainer
Pronouns
he/him
Partners
  1. samurott

Chapter 24 - Secrets​


“What’s the matter with that jerk?”

George stomped his way out of the building, dragging Blitzer along with him back to the front of the hovel. The red scarf around his neck had heated up to a discomforting degree. His free hand was tugging it loose, yet the heat didn’t disappear. It wouldn’t yield even to the cool breeze that passed by. Even for something that retained heat well, it was absurd. Right this second, Greenfield was lucky George wasn’t a fire breather like Blitzer. Half the town would’ve been ablaze by now. All for Blitzer’s sake.

The young Charmander was utterly overwhelmed. His mouth was hanging ajar, a dim shadow had taken hold of his eyes, and his limbs just kind of hung around, taped onto his body without any sense of control. He still hadn’t said a word ever since Hein had given his performance in the cafe. It had captivated him. Controlled him. Dominated him, as if the weight of the world was crushing him into the ground.

“Who does he think he is, doing that to someone else? And then he wants to act like nothing happened, ‘oh here’s your stupid package, kids’. And why does he treat us like idiots? You for being you, me for calling him out? Then he all but threatens to use his ghost magic on us!” George pouted, erratically waving a hand in front of his face, mimicking a finger point and foam coming out of his mouth. A lone Roselia passing by stared for a little while, before walking with the wind.

As George ranted, Blitzer’s eyes stared on ahead. It was less of a stare, and more plain pointing ahead. Like most others, ghosts in his eyes were nothing but an oddity, spoken of as faraway tales rather than neighbours. Having seen what he had seen, it wasn’t surprising anymore that no one stood up to Hein, or even mentioned him much. Some things about the world are best left unknown. Life was easier that way. Much, much easier.

It was too late for George and Blitzer now, though. One was mortified, the other was fuming.

“Argh! We let him just walk all over us. Again. You know what, I’ll tell that Tangrowth to just hand it straight to us next time.”

“If there even is a next time…” Blitzer then whimpered. George stopped dead in his tracks, a few steps removed from the front door of the hovel, which had taken on a dull green tint.. Say one thing for Blitzer, say he’s a grab bag of emotions. Cheery and optimistic, angry and stomping his feet, scared or in pain, nervous or curious, he swung around like a wind chime in a hurricane. Yet here he was now, gasping and rubbing his head. George’s teeth pressed into his lip.

“Hey, are you alright?”

“Y-yes, I am. Don’t worry about me.”

“You don’t sound alright.”

“I’m just worried, that’s all.”

George pressed his tongue into his cheeks. ‘He’s thinking about something. It can’t be anything good, I can feel it.’ He thumbed and cleared his nose. “After what that… cyclops pulled just now, who wouldn’t be. We should talk about it.”

He had to pause to come up with a valid way to describe Hein. There were too many parallels back home to pick from. The Reaper most of all, but mentioning that name would only make the situation worse. Blitzer drew an exasperated breath, throwing his arms into the air beside him. He appeared to be wobbling back and forth with the wind.

“That can’t be a good idea. He might still be listening in.”

George shook his head. “He’s not following us anymore, I’m sure of it.”

“How? You don’t know if he’s still listening in,” Blitzer whispered. “He could be in the ground. Or in a wall. In an object, even. He can be anywhere.”

“Believe me,” George said, reaching out to the Charmander’s shoulder with a hand, “I have an instinct for that damn cyclops. We’ll be fine. He’s not watching.” ‘And it’s not a bluff.’

Blitzer sighed. “Okay then. I didn’t want to talk about this, but- no, I should be telling you. It’s important. Hein… He’s, he’s giving me really strange vibes.”

George folded his arms. ‘Tell me about it.’ “ Just about everyone in that cafe is probably thinking twice about going back in there another day. I’m sure. How long has he been in business for?”

“Years, I guess, ow,” Blitzer said while biting on his tongue. George stood close enough to him to smell a hint of iron amidst the ash and fruit that he was breathing out. He sucked in a breath with gritted teeth.

“Years? Are you kidding? This can’t be the first time, can it?" George asked. Blitzer stared at the human turned Oshawott with an awkward curl in his mouth. No response, he just wobbled. This wasn’t the time to be asking stupid questions. George had blurted one out anyway. His cheeks puffed up; the undisturbed sounds of the stream and the toiling of other Pokemon made George reach for the back of his head.

“S-sorry, just pretend you didn’t hear anything.” ‘Of course he’s been at it for years, who in this village can even stand up to him?’

“D-don’t worry, okay.” Blitzer gulped. “It’s not him being creepy or rude, that I’m used to. He isn’t from these parts. My parents told me that you shouldn’t trust strange adults, because they don’t have your best interest in mind. After getting bashed for being a Charmander a few times, I finally understood what they meant. I still don’t like it whenever it happens, but…” he paused to sniff. “You get used to it.”

George nodded without the strength to look the Charmander in the eye. “I get you.” ‘I wish I didn’t, though…’

Blitzer clicked his tongue. “But that’s not what I meant. Don’t you think it’s odd that we’re getting these messages from him, of all people? He’s not from here, he appeared about four years ago, and no one’s ever even heard from him before. Yet he of all people is giving us weird information that might get us into serious trouble if anyone else finds out about it? Who is he, even? Who’s to say he’s not doing this on purpose for someone?”

George’s out snapped open; a gasp of air flew straight in. His ears weren’t deceiving him. It was a full blown accusation of nefarious intent. “Are you sure of this?”

“I can’t think of anything else,” Blitzer replied.

George bit his lip. A double agent. That’s what Blitzer was saying. With how detailed that one-eyed ghost’s descriptions had been, the chance he wasn’t involved in this was as tiny as a hair in George’s fur. For who, though? The Soldiers? Perhaps that was why that Garchomp came to visit their village a few days ago. They were being watched all along. Their secrets weren’t really secrets. A third eye had been reading and following along with them all along. The trap could snap shut at any minute, yet the grass camouflaging it remained stiff. Nothing had happened. Not yet. George chose to remain on the side of optimism. The grass there was greener.

“But wouldn’t they have come for us, then? It’s been a while since we got or hands on,” his eyed panned over the surrounding houses and distant trees, “That. He’s known us for longer than that, too. There’s not much left to discover if he’s been listening in all this time.”

Blitzer shook his head. “I don’t know George, I’ve just got a bad feeling about all of this.” George affirmidly nodded back.

“Me too.”

“I don’t know what I’m going to do,” Blitzer said while twiddling his claws between one another. “Maybe I’m not cut out for this kind of thing.”

George shook his head. “That’s ridiculous, Blitzer. You’re the last person in the world who can say that about themselves.”

“What do you mean?”

“Well, look at all the places you dragged me off to. I’m not even that used to my own body yet. Then look at you go. Spitting fire and clawing and sniffing like it’s no big deal. I can’t do any of that.”

George pressed a few fingers into the blue fur above his scalchop. There had been a few times during his sleep or games with the others where he had ideas involving spitting water, or using his scalchop to cut something, but he hadn’t ever acted on them. The body may be different, but the soul is the same. The only humans who’d spit water or wave sharp objects around were lunatics. Even one in the body of an otter couldn’t shake that feeling off.

Blitzer shook his head. “I don’t know… it feels like I’m losing that too.”

“Huh?” George raised an eyebrow. “Didn’t you see yourself yesterday? You burned that Victreebel good! You were jumping all over the place like it was nothing! What do you mean?” he asked. What Blitzer said didn’t mesh with what George believed. He had control, and he didn’t need any help. Did he?

“No, you- something’s happening to me and I don’t know what,” Blitzer nervously churred. “My head’s been throbbing since yesterday. My arms feel all weird and prickly, like I’ve been sleeping on them, but that won’t go away either. And my legs feel so shaky and weird, I can’t stand on them well anymore,”

George shot a glance towards said legs, and bit his lip as the sight of them veering off backwards.They weren’t steady in the slightest. It looked as if Blitzer was constantly on the verge of flopping over backwards, right down the slope and into the stream. He heard the splash in the back of his head, and grimaced. ‘Ouch.’ “You might be sick.”

Blitzer shook his head. “I tried asking my parents this morning, but they are all weird about it. They won’t give me a straight answer. They’re all like, ‘oh, you’re just getting the cramps, you get those when you get older’, but then they’re smirking in weird ways.”

“Oh.” George tapped his foot against the dirt. ‘They must be hiding something too. Last I heard, cramps don’t just pop up at random. And I thought cramps only affected the lower half.’ “Do you-”

“What are cramps?”

“Ah!”

Blitzer’s right foot made a sharp shift to the side, causing him to lose balance and drop onto his belly. Likewise, George spun around and stumbled to get decent footing. His eyes were drawn to a lightning bolt twitching back and forth up the path.

“Oh hey lads, I didn’t startle you, did I?”

Upon seeing the familiar orange face up ahead shove his way into the conversation without so much as a care in the world, George had but a frown to give. “Speedy, what's your problem?”

Speedy pointed at himself with both paws. “Problem? Just an ordinary Raichu here. Don’ mind me.”

Blitzer pulled his head out of the dirt with an urp. Some might have slipped into his mouth; he didn’t look particularly pleased. “A little warning would’ve been nice, you know…”

“No worries, I’ll do one better next time,” Speedy said with a wink. Whether George or Blitzer liked it or not, he walked up the path towards them. George folded his arms. There wasn’t much use in saying no to someone who had already said yes in his stead. “Nah lads, I just came here to check up on you lot. See if those parents of you didn’t give you a whoopin’ yesterday, ‘cause that very well could’ve happened, you know! Actually, that’s silly of me, I should probably ask. How’d they react?”

Blitzer got up and polished the cream-colored scales off his chest with a few slaps. “Annoyed we took so long to get back. I had to dodge a few questions on what took us until the evening.”

Speedy nodded along. “And you didn’t say anything about the fight we-” he was cut off by the sound of George making loud hissing noises. Seeing the two fingers the Oshawott was holding up to his mouth, he ducked his tongue in one of his cheeks for a second. “I mean, what we were busy with that afternoon, right?”

“Of course not. I’m not stupid,” Blitzer said with a careless sway of his tail, which caused him to lose his grip on his footing. “Ah!”

“And what about you, George, did you say anythin’?” Speedy continued, paying Blitzer’s antics no mind. George pulled up his arms.

“Not really, no.”

“You’re not a big talker, are ya?”

“...No, not really.”

“Is that a Northern thing I’m not aware of?” Speedy placed a paw in front of the widening grin on his face. George ducked a lip inwards.

“Something like that, yeah. I mean, Blitzer is better at talking, and he’s lived here all his life, I’m sure. Surrounded by uh, by the… southern life?” George thumbed his nose. Trying to come up with a convincing story of where he’s from was a nightmare. If only he actually knew what he was talking about, this would be so much easier. How he wished for one of those magic lamps that granted three wishes if you just rubbed it. Life would be a lot less stressful.

“Well lad, there ain’t no southern life I know of, but Agate’s about as far south as it gets! Well, except for Kronn Province, but that place is dry, and it sucks. So yes, Agate’s the south! And we’re all a talkative, friendly bunch here! Might take a while if you’re new, but stick around long enough, and you’ll see,” Speedy said. George clicked his tongue. The Raichu seemed convinced enough, at least. His nerves eased a little; he used the moment to steer the conversation back on track.

“But yes, Blitzer talks very well. So I let him do the talking for me.”

“Hey now,” Blitzer chirped with an excited crackle, “don’t blame me, talking is fun! You get to meet and know people with talking! It’s how I express myself best! Better than any other way!” he said with both claws exaggeratedly pressing against his sides as if he were showing off his strength.

George twirled his ears around. ‘Doesn’t everyone do that?’

Speedy chuckled, giving his pale belly a good thump with one of his paws. Said paw bounced right off. “Hoho, well I’m glad you two managed to get off without a scratch! ‘Cause you know, I was getting pretty worried about the both of you. Didn’t see you this morning at all!”

George shrugged. “We were just playing games with the other kids. Junior, too.”

Speedy stood up on his toes. “Oh! Well now, I must’ve missed it then. Busy morning for me.”

To this, George puffed out his cheeks. For a father, he sure didn’t seem to be very concerned with what his kid was up to. “Busy morning? Yesterday was busy enough though, what did you have to do now?” George asked.

“Oh, uh, Cleaning around the house, of course!” Speedy answered, rubbing the back of his head with a single paw. “Junior is quite a messy boy, so I always have to take my time to sweep up the house, you know. Clean up the dust, the little food crumbs we leave around, that sort of thing, heheh.”

“Well, you’re a great cook just like my mom, so I can understand!” Blitzer said while walking up to the Raichu, who smiled in relief upon seeing him approach.

“Why, that’s very kind of you, Blitzer!”

George made a loud click with his tongue. There wasn’t any point in trying to suppress the slapping of his tail into the dirt this time around; the gravel path always kicked up a cloud of dust noticeable enough after the first slap, and it wasn’t as if he had anything to hide, anyway. Surely Speedy knew that behaving like a drunken uncle wasn’t going to net him any favours. In fact, George wasn’t the first, the second, or even the twelfth person to be disappointed hearing it. Those feelings weren’t worth the effort of hiding.

Unfortunately, that lack of effort extended to his hands; his fingers slipped and revealed a sizable chunk of the light brown paper he’d been clinging onto.

“Hm? What’s that you’re holding there?”

At first, George didn’t pay any heed to the fact that Speedy’s eyes were leering onto the paper. It just sort of flew over him that the paper’s contents weren’t anything he’d want leaked. For a second, it was just a paper, and it was just Speedy. What could possibly go wrong? Then the answer hit him. A lot.

“O-oh, uh, n-nothing.”

“What’s the paper for?”

“It’s uuuh, a-a- grocery list? Yes!” George blurted out.

“What’s a grocery list?” Blitzer asked. “Wait a minute-”

“List of stuff to buy! From home- the north I mean!” George followed right after. Blitzer flinched for a second; his thoughts were lagging behind.

“Oh yes, eh, you told me about it! That’s the uhh... My parents wanted me to buy some… stuff…” the Charmander’s eyes slowly turned from George to the Raichu standing right next to him, who appeared dumbfounded by their little performance. The nerves were shooting off them like shedding hairs. Even an insect could tell.

“You know lads, no need to hide things from me. I don’t go around telling anyone.”

George bit his lip, then sighed. “Okay. Um, this will sound really weird, but,” he paused to swallow his saliva, “we’ve been getting these strange messages every so often. They come from that cyclops in the cafe. Oh, and this Tangrowth, too. Last time we had to pick up something, now we have to deliver it somewhere.”

George and Blitzer looked at each other with a slight sense of defeat. George in particular wasn’t happy. He hadn’t revealed the flute piece as of yet, but he couldn’t shake off the idea that he had just opened Pandora’s Box, and that Speedy would have a torrent of questions for them, until every secret had been pilfered from their minds.

Speedy leaned backwards, looking at them both with his arms folded and a smug little smile growing on his face. “Well now, why didn’t you lads say so earlier?”

“...Huh?”

George opened his mouth, yet said nothing. Speedy was seemingly overjoyed. “Now whatever you might think, know that my doors are always open for ya. It’s the least I could do, alright?”

“You already told me,” Blitzer replied. Speedy nodded right back at him, his feet tapping into the dirt.

“I haven’t told your friend yet! Hm… I wish I had more to say right now, but eh, I’m afraid I’m running on empty here!” he said, then turned his head. The rest of Greenfield behind him was as sleepy as ever; a light breeze did little to stir Pokemon and vegetation alike. “If you excuse me, I need to get going.”

“...really?”

“Yup! I’ll probably come back some other time! Tomorrow, maybe! See you lads around”

George couldn’t believe his ears. Speedy was already crossing the bridge down the path by the time Blitzer managed to squeak out a ‘bye’. There was a slight bounce to his step, not an uncontrolled one like Blitzer’s, but a giddy one. All over a piece of paper. He buckled his lips inwards.

“Well, uh, that just happened,” Blitzer said, tail dangling about in a neutral manner. “Do you think he has something to do with those messages we’re getting?” he asked George, tipping his head around slightly until the Oshawott’s face dipped into his view.

George folded his arms over his scalchop. “There’s obviously more than he’s telling us. But what? He’s still the same.”

Blitzer nodded. “Yeah, he’s still uncle Speedy,” he said. George nodded along. Uncle Speedy. It seemed ridiculous to put it that way, but the connection was there. Thinking back, nothing about the Raichu seemed off. That orange fur ball had his secrets, but nefarious intentions? Not a chance. Given how long Blitzer had known him, the coast seemed clear enough.

“So, uh, what do we do now?”

“I don’t know.”

George drew a deep breath as he looked over the rain stained roofs of Greenfield. “Back to the others once we’ve put the message away. I’m not in the mood to go exploring, that’s for sure.”

“Yeah, good idea.” Blitzer looked on with George for a few seconds, before an idea shot into his head. “Wait, one question.”

George turned his head around. “What is it?”

“What’s a cyclops? You said Hein was one, what is that?” Blitzer asked, to which George shrugged. ‘No harm here saying that much, right?’

“A monster from Greek mythology. I read a book about them once for school, I think. They only have one eye, and since Hein only has one eye, I thought it was fitting.”

Blitzer’s eyes lit up. “Ooh, a monster? Do they have scales, and wings and stuff? Are they strong and all heroic?“

George thumbed his nose. “Well, they’re not Charizards, for one-”

The Charmander leaned forward. “And what’s Greek mythology? You can’t just keep all these human things for yourself!”

Grumbling, George rolled his eyes. ‘I’ve opened up Pandora’s box, alright…’
 
Chapter 25

Gyeig

Junior Trainer
Pronouns
he/him
Partners
  1. samurott

Chapter 25 - The Honcho​


An iron door slammed into a stone wall. The reverberations rang through the air with the force to rupture an eardrum. Chains rattled as the splash of footsteps came past. Gareda eyed the watery ground at her feet and spat at it. It reeked here. Reeked of mother nature trying to reclaim what was hers. No one had bothered to inform her that she was anything but welcome in Agate Township. No one was, all things considered. Not that anyone would want to be here. So Gareda hoped. That’s how she felt. Anywhere except this hole underground that reeked of mushroom pollen and muddy water.

But a job’s a job. Someone has to do it in the end. And the only one the Vined Crown trusted with the job was Gareda. Of all the Pokemon in the world, her. In a way it was flattering. In a way it was insulting. Most of all though, it was regrettable to take on. Gareda shook her head as she paced up the waterlogged hallways.

‘Says a lot that not even the guards come down here, doesn’t it. No one here but me and whoever’s behind these doors. I’ve sunken to a new low, haven’t I? She grimaced; a talon was pressing into her chest. ‘Stop thinking this to yourself. You’re doing this for them, remember.’

She kept herself steady as she ventured deeper inside. The hallway was narrow. Far too narrow. Evidently, whoever had been put in charge of digging it out hadn’t considered the possibility of a dragon having to use it. Least of all a mountain dragon, like Gareda was. Annoyed as she may be at the cramped conditions, she couldn’t blame the builder. Her kin generally stuck to their mountainous turf, and in a more just world, she’d be there with her kin. She wouldn’t have to be here in the first place, and the only Pokemon this prison needed to store were the local thuggery, who’d fit here like a glove.

Row seven, at the far end of the tunnel. This was the spot; Gareda took the right hand path and walked the short distance to the back of that tunnel as well. There, by a candle stood an iron door, blocked by a group of Pawniard, who were submerged up to their lower rib.. Gareda’s tongue slipped out of her lips for a second; all she could think of was the one time she’d eaten a feral Pawniard. She learned a valuable lesson that day. She hated Pawniard.

“It’s the missus.”

“Missus?”

“Yes, the missus, right there. From the crown.”

“Ah.”

Gareda put her foot down, sending water flying. “Out of the way. I need to speak with the prisoner.”

“A thank you would be nice, missus.” One Pawniard scraped his blade arms over one another. The Garchomp rolled her eyes.

‘For a half metal, he’s sure brave when talking to someone who could split the earth under his feet open. Blegh. Pawniards…’
Keeping her talons on her sensors until the squeaky voices of all the Pawniards had quietened down, Gareda stretched her neck before hanging her cloak up on a small hook by the door. It felt liberating to toss that rag aside. Always got in the way, always made her look ridiculous in her eyes. Too bad there was no ridding herself of the ridiculous pink scarf wrapped around her neck. Of all colours in the world, Pecha had to be pink. She stretched her arms, then bonked on the iron door several times, each blow of her arm sending a hollow echo into the cell beyond. When it was showtime, she put full strength into her arm. The door was blasted open into the cell, sending a wave-like ripple through the ground water.

“Wake up. Now.”

Inside the cell sat a Toxicroak on a raised platform. It was the lone spot in the cell that wasn’t flooded. The air was cold, and damp. Mushrooms had grown at the base of the walls; were it not for the candle outside shining through the bars in the doors, it would’ve been dark as well. Unsurprisingly, the Toxicroak wasn’t in the mood to look his guest in the eye. Any doubts he might have had were confirmed by Gareda’s overwhelming presence. The sound of her footsteps trudging in the water. The scent of her scales. In this corner of the world, they were second to none.

“Why are you here..,” the Toxicroak huffed, puffing up the red sac under his chin as it took on an almost meditative position. He was turned away from the door. Each breath extended the sac under his chin to its fullest extent, and each heavy exhale shrank it down. His claws were tied together by a large chain. Gareda hissed between her teeth, assuming a scowl.

“You know what I am here for. Playing stupid gets you nowhere with me.”

The Toxicroak spat at the wall; the saliva sizzled as it scaled down onto the platform. “As if I would say a word about it to you. You ruined my business. Killed my bros. All you’ve left for me is a sewer.”

“Blame whichever clown runs this circus. If they cared, we wouldn’t be having a flood here,” Gareda growled; a cold pulse up her tail made her bare teeth. ‘Some kingdom this is. Can’t even provide for itself.’

The Toxicroak stretched his neck. “You Vined bastards have been in control for Arceus knows how long. This is the result,” he croaked out.

Gareda stomped her feet. “Answer me. What do you know?”

“You’ve never even told me what I’m supposed to know,” the Toxicroak replied. “I’m just a businessman running my business along with my partners, when a little electric runt and two stupid kids show up to rob me of my wares.”

“You were nothing but a thief. One of many scum infesting the Agate Province.” Gareda stepped out of the water and onto the platform. A fiery tuft shot out of her maw, onto a candle which was haphazardly lodged into the wall. An orange light cast her attention on the streaks of torn scales and dried blood all over the Toxicroak’s back. Her handiwork from yesterday. “Not a damn chance in the Distortion that you haven’t got a clue about what goes on around these parts.”

The prisoner croaked a weak, defiant scoff. “What, you mean the rebel organisations? The ones you and your ilk wiped out?”

Gareda’s face didn’t budge. “So you do know.”

“Hard to forget. Gghhh.” Another spat of saliva sizzled its way down the wall. “I’ve seen the fields myself. After you were done with them. That’ll never leave me, ever…”

The prisoner’s voice was grating on the ears. It was almost a snarl. As if a creature from the darkness was using the Pokemon’s body as a vessel. Gareda found herself assuming a battle stance. Didn’t matter how tight those chains were. Better to be safe than sorry.

“I don’t care about what you saw. Tell me what you did. You’ve got contacts with the insurgents, haven’t you?”

The Toxicroak turned his head over his shoulder. “Hah! You wiped all the insurgents out…hagh!” his gaze fell away as quick as it had turned. Without grace, he coughed and coughed, spatters of poison from the red sac falling over the ground and sticking onto the wall. He winced and fell forward, leaning against the cracked stone floor with both talons, which had awkwardly squirmed around in the chains to manage. It was almost too pathetic to look at. Almost. Gareda’s eyes had been witness to far worse displays of Krookodile tears. Always the ones with the biggest pendants for lawlessness that cried the hardest when the strong arm of the law caught up with them.

“Sure that’s what happened… that’s why the thieves who stole the Azure Flute from the Crest trafficked it through here,” Gareda said, careful to not mention that it was only a single piece. May Arceus have mercy on her soul if she lets that detail slip. “So then, thief. Spit it out. Where are your rebel contacts?”

“I don’t have any damn rebel contacts!” the Toxicroak groaned out. A growl came out of Gareda’s throat. She had no time for games or liars. Like thunder, she raised her foot and kicked the Toxicroak in the back.

“Aaaaaagh!!”

“Stop lying to me, wart neck. You had an Alliance badge in your possession! Your still living partners spilled the beans on that already! Where are your CONTACTS?”

Shivering, the Toxicroak rolled onto his back, croaking in pain from his flaring wounds. Gareda’s kick had hit him square at the crossroads where two cuts from her arms had met a day earlier. The skin was ripped; drips of foul, toxic liquid poured out of the tears.

“You’ve… you’ve killed them all already! I have given up the cause long ago, demon!... Gnghr!”

Gareda tilted her head backwards. ‘Look who’s talking.’ “So you are part of the cause! How very honest of you, wart neck.”

“I gave it up!! I don’t care what happens to ‘em anymore, they’re fools!” A weak croak came out of the Toxicroak’s throat. He wasn’t holding out for long. Everyone cracks eventually, no matter how hard the shell. Gareda let a growl slip out of her throat, continuing to put cracks in the egg before the truth would finally burst out. It wouldn’t be long anymore, her sensors told her.

“That’s what they all say. They all lie.”

“It’s not a lie, damn you! Listen to- gaacck!”

The prisoner whimpered as he felt the foot of the Garchomp press against his neck. “I’m not an idiot. Unfortunate for you, isn’t it?” she said, cracking a smile from a pulse of the sensory organs on the side of her head, which made her work all the easier. “I know the truth. You left because you felt no hope. You saw the uprising be put down, and bolted before it caught up with you. But you cannot run forever. Deep down, you knew full well that you had to face the music someday. And that day is today.”

She rolled the prisoner onto his side using her foot. The room was aghast by the hyperventilating coming from under Gareda’s feet. The Garchomp stretched her arms, and kept her tail perfectly still as she built up pressure in her right arm. Strength fueled by a primal energy deep inside her; the blood in her right arm sang a tune of joy as the energy coursed through her veins. A deep sense of pride stirred up within her. The kind of self pride only a dragon could hoist. Her talon took on a bright green glow. A smile formed on her mouth.

“Either you’re going to spit it all out right now, or you’ll be spitting it out later. You don’t have a choice here.”

The tip of the scythe pressed against the prisoner’s neck. “P-please, no…” His breathing sped up even further. Eyes wide as a Carnivine’s mouth, breaths like hollow winter winds, skin vibrating under the duress of death. Even thieves did not go this far. Gareda’s scowl loomed overhead, her eyes full of hatred. Hatred ill suited for a mere thief.

“One last time. Spit it out.”

* * *​

The hearth crackled. A group of Pawniard were putting kindling inside of it. The same group of Pawniard guarding the cell earlier, by the smell of it. Gareda huffed at them as she emerged from the cell blocks, cloak and all.

“There’s the missus!”

“Yes, I’m done. You can go back now.” Gareda rolled her eyes.

“Missus, what happened to your arm?” One Pawniard pointed the others towards the tip of the scythe on her right arm as she walked past, tail swinging back and forth. She didn’t bother to answer their question, instead preferring to scowl out ahead of her.

“Missus?”

Gareda tilted her head so, that the Pawniard could catch a glimpse of an eye and several teeth. “Get back to your posts, ingrates.”

“Yes, missus!” the Pawniard one and all shouted, forming up a line before running down the stairs into the cell blocks. Gareda’s scowl deepened at the sight of the crackling hearth they had left behind. There might be little kindling around, yet fires were wild. Raging. Uncontrollable. Blink an eye and you’re surrounded. Anyone who has visited the Ruby Province as much as Gareda had would know.

Why she thought of the Ruby Province on the other hand, she didn’t know. Her sensors came up with the idea. In hindsight, that should’ve been the first sign she wasn’t alone here. She had no clue, until a smoky smell streamed into her nostrils. The source was sitting by a low table only a few steps away, smirking.

“Took you long enough.”

“Blegh. I haven’t slept for too long,” Gareda huffed. “Damn inspections take forever.”

Luffy leaned forward over the steel table, her tail playfully flicking up behind. “Why now, are you sure you’re not losing your edge?”

Gareda rolled her eyes. “Calm down, duck face. I still wouldn’t try my luck on me if I were anyone else,” she said, tugging on the pink scarf wrapped around her neck. ‘This thing is bloody hideous.’

“Nice scarf, by the way.”

“This ugly thing?”

“Ugly?” Luffy began drumming her claws onto the sheet of steel. “Not going to lie to you, I think you look cute with it.”

Gareda scoffed her way into a laugh. Part of her felt insulted. As if she was being labelled weak for the whole world to see. The rest of her struggled to comprehend it. Those words. Luffy saying the words with a straight face. Her eyes were drawn to the pink rag and its thin white stripes. The light of the hearth and the flame on Luffy’s tail made the sharp contrast between the scarf and her ink blue scales even more sinful. She looked Luffy in the eye. She couldn’t get a scowl on her face, even when actively trying to form one.

“Pfft! You ought to get better taste.”

“My taste is fine enough,” Luffy replied, much to Gareda’s amusement.

“You say it like you actually believe in it.”

The Magmar shrugged. “Believe it? Well, I certainly do. I can’t help it. And no, I’m not ashamed of it either,” she said with a proud smile. Gareda turned and walked a step away, grinning and stretching.

‘What a joy to be surrounded by idiots. Confident idiots, at that. It’s kind of charming, actually.’

“Oh my, what is that?”

“Hm?” Gareda flicked herself back around with a wild swing of her tail. In the blink of an eye, Luffy’s mood had soured, and not by a scant amount, either. One could practically draw a line between her face and what she’d caught wind of. Gareda hadn’t paid much attention to the striking fin on her right arm herself, despite the toxic fluids slathered onto it.

“What happened to your arm?”

The Garchomp sighed. “This is why I’m wearing this ugly rag around my neck to begin with, Luffy. I’m no stranger to being poisoned. Plenty of experiences from my childhood and later that I’d love to have wiped from my memory.” She paused to smooth the cloak on her back. Anything to distract herself from having to remember the taste of poisoned vomit in her mouth. “When the time came to interrogate the ringleader today, I wasn’t going to take any chances.”

Luffy’s eyes shifted all over the place. Tufts of fire the size of a pinky finger escaped her mouth whenever she exhaled.. “But how did the interrogation get to that point? Did he… did he manage to attack you?”

Gareda kept her mouth shut for a while. Her tongue pressed against her teeth. An old lecture from a relative came rushing back. ‘Don’t accept nonsense, and don’t give nonsense’ was the gist of it. She was about to fly straight into the face of that. In truth, it was better not to be straightforward sometimes. Luffy wasn’t ready to see or hear this side of her just yet. Gareda didn’t like it. Not one bit. But there was no accomplishing the mission without staying in Luffy’s good graces.

“It is as you say. While prying answers out of him, he saw an opening and attacked. Well, he thought he saw an opening. I’m not so easily fooled.” A glob of saliva audibly slid down Gareda’s throat. “Unfortunate, yes, but it is what it is. I’ve already inspected the wound. The prisoner will be fine.”

“Are you sure?” Luffy tapped the tips of her claws against one another.

“Believe me. That group of Pawniard know what they are doing.” ‘I wish.’

Luffy hummed a dull note and turned to face away. Her concerns weren’t escaping Gareda’s notice. She didn’t believe in her own story, and some of that had to have shone through. There was no fixing it now, though. In the end, the prisoner had given her what she needed, and that was what counted. Staying in the Vined Crown’s favour wasn’t easy. Keeping a clear conscience all the while? Impossible.

“So… did you get anything out of the interrogation?” Luffy whispered.

Gareda paced up beside the Magmar, patting her on the back of the neck with a talon, much to Luffy’s surprise. “No need to get all concerned. Of course we got what we needed. It’s as I suspected, that entire crew had ties to the Alliance. They’ve severed them now to profit off petty crime, but they existed. Turns out that they had robbed an old contact of theirs.”

Luffy raised her head out of her slouch. “Huh? Really now?” Her tail flickered up and down out of curiosity. “That’s terrible.”

Gareda shrugged. “They’re former Alliance. What do you expect?” she said, while stretching her neck. It felt as if it had been slathered with cobwebs.

“Well, even they should have some sort of moral compass, right?” Luffy said, looking down at her feet. Gareda held none of her optimism. She didn’t share a word of it. Ignorance is bliss in a bleak reality.

“In any case, we have a lead now. Remember that Raichu and those two children he had with him?. Gareda asked. Luffy nodded. “That’s the old contact. He was there to take his badge back.”

“Wait, Vli said the same thing, right? After he followed them for a while.”

“Indeed. We’ve got our lead alright. That Raichu.” Gareda sneered off into the hearth crackling away in the corner.

“Nice!” Luffy exclaimed, clasping her hands together. “So, are you planning on arresting that Pokemon? And what about the kids?”

“That’s what I was about to get to. We need to know more about what goes on in that little town of theirs. Greenfield. You remember it, don’t you?”

Luffy nodded. “That hostile town, you mean.”

“Exactly,” Gareda grunted. “They’re from there. It wouldn’t surprise me if there’s more Alliance activity in that town. Explains a lot. But we can’t go in there and take prisoners. We’ve got enough to arrest the Raichu. Whether he knows about the flute, though… I want to know more. A lot more.” The Garchomp shut her eyes. She pictured a dream world in which a freckled otter and a jumpy lizard were standing side by side, facing her much like an enemy would. “Especially about those kids.”

“What about them?” Luffy asked. “They’re just kids. Brave kids, though, they’ve got the courage of Ruby folks, haha!”

Gareda growled a huff. “I don’t think they’re just kids, Luffy. Something about them doesn’t seem right to me. That little otter boy in particular. He has a very peculiar aura hanging around him. I can’t let it slide.“

“Aura? What?” Luffy asked, much to Gareda’s chagrin. ‘She always has another stupid question to ask whenever I say something. Ugh. Duck faced, sometimes duck brained.’

“We all have an aura about us. You might not realize it, but you have one as well. Think of it as a thumbprint of your soul… a soulprint, so to speak,” Gareda explained. “If you were to gleam into mine, you’d be able to determine that I’m a dragon, and an earthling. But that’s just the surface level. And it doesn’t matter. That boy, however…”

“He doesn’t seem any different to me.”

“Trust me, he is. There’s something profoundly… Unpokemonlike about him.” Gareda stared into the hearth. A ghastly pop cracked inside. “Not just in the aura, in his mannerisms too. The way he walks. He’s not as bouncy as an Oshawott should be. Too reserved. Too collected and thinking. But that’s besides the point. I want a set of eyes on him. Multiple, actually. Do you think you and Vli could handle that?”

Luffy got off her rocky seat. “Without a doubt! I’ve gotten plenty of dirty looks in my life. Livin’ in the Ruby Hills strengthens you against it. I can handle some more from village grassies, no problem.”

Gareda cracked a light smirk. “Good. I want you and him to go there tomorrow. I’ll see you out then. Until then, you get to enjoy Agate Township.” ‘As if there’s anything enjoyable here.’

Luffy saluted with a beaming smile. “Will do!” she said. Gareda nodded in approval. She felt a little happier now.
 
Chapter 26

Gyeig

Junior Trainer
Pronouns
he/him
Partners
  1. samurott

Chapter 26 - Mysterious Woods​


The next morning, George woke up with a sore throat. Say one thing for Blitzer, say that he has unhealthy interests in worlds he’ll never see. He got George to exhaust the little mythology he knew about, which turned into a long talk about the deities of Eravate, Blitzer wasn’t exactly the best at explaining things, either. Something something lustrous, something temporal, something sea then earth, then a bunch of rambling about guardians. Not much of it survived the trip from Blitzer to George intact. The talk of an ‘Arceus’ was the lone thing George could remember by that morning, if only because of the amount of times that name had been thrown around.

In the end, there was always tomorrow for hearing more. Maybe he’d learn better when the pressure of making the delivery wasn’t pinching him in the back of the head. Indeed, they had promised to be up early to go back into Greenwood Forest, the Mystery Dungeon near town, where the flute piece they had found earlier was supposed to be handed off.

Breakfast went by without much care. Nero and Nera’s temper had calmed, it seemed, and they didn’t appear to suspect a thing the two had planned. As such, they had no issue making their way out the door and into the waiting arms of the sunlight. It was a beautiful day outside; the flowers were blooming and spreading their pollen, the stream was ripe with activity, and those of nature were wearing their best smiles: Even the Eldegoss lady which Blitzer had a sour run in with when he was introducing George to Greenfield for the first time. A perfect day for exploring, in short; George and Blitzer smiled with their neighbours.

It was a short walk out of the town and back to the clearing before the Mystery Dungeon proper. This time, George didn’t feel so nervous over the prospect of heading inside. Even with the flute piece nestled in between the folds of his scarf, he was ready; the Pokemon that lived in Greenfield Forest couldn’t have changed in these past few weeks. Unfortunately, Blitzer’s odd walk hadn’t disappeared - neither had the headache, if the occasional rub over his scalp was anything to go by. Sure, he still pressed on, and if they could manage the slopes of Azure Hills or a dirty band of thieves, surely the bugs of Greenfield Forest wouldn’t be an issue, but it didn’t sit right.

Upon reaching the small clearing at the entrance of the dungeon, Blitzer stretched his arms; a yawn freed itself out of his throat, unburned by the shifting feet underneath. “Aaaah, here we are again! You know George, I’ve kind of been missing this dungeon. You remember that clearing, don’t you?”

George gave a tepid nod. “It’s hard to forget a view like that. But what is there to miss other than that? It’s just a dark forest.”

Blitzer swished his tail through a breeze. “It’s not just a forest! I’ve spent so many days exploring this place, and I can’t get enough of it! This forest inspired me to become an explorer, you know.”

George folded his arms over his scalchop. “Yeah, yeah, I understand you.” ‘Though I’m still not sure if exploring is even a profession.’ “You’ve got a few years of exploring on me, remember?”

Blitzer’s head bobbed up and down. “Oh yes, you’ll see what I mean eventually. I promise!” he shouted. With puffy cheeks, George wandered over to the wooden sign at the mouth of the forest. It had a slight purplish tint he didn’t remember seeing before.

“So, about that view, do you think that’s where the stump is?” the Oshawott said, fiddling his fingers around the paper in his hand. Blitzer threw his hands over his head.

“Yup, a hundred percent! The center’s the only part of the dungeon that stays the same. Whoever wants the flute so badly will be lost for hours looking for it if we don’t leave it there! And I know that central meadow’s the place in the message, I remember seeing the stump of an old tree very well. No chance of it being someplace else!”

George took his time to review the note. The details were sparse - too sparse, as a matter of fact. All it told of was a flat surface somewhere in Greenwood Forest. Hein’s description from yesterday had given them more to work with, and after seeing him lay a dark spell on a patron, whether a word that came out of that ghost’s mouth was trustworthy was up for debate. Blitzer seemed steadfast about where to go, however, and they weren’t spoiled for choice here. Either the center, or standing out here listening to the leaves brush up against each other.

“Well, might as well give it a try. I mean, it’s only Greenfield Forest.”

Blitzer winked at the former human. “Darn straight! We’ve got this, alright. Even if we have to stay a little longer, what difference does a few more bugs make?” he said with a contagious chuckle, which George caught right after.

“Not a whole lot, that’s for sure.”

“So then, are we all prepared?” Blitzer asked, smoothing his scarf. George shook his head.

“Let’s check again, I’d rather not go in there and find out we’re missing something.”

The Charmander nodded back. “Sure thing. Let’s see here, scarves?”

“Check.”

“Food?”

“Breakfast was enough.”

“Medicine?”

“Hard to come by, and dinky little bug poison is no big deal.”

“Flute?”

“Definitely,” George said, peeling back a fold of his scarf to reveal the flute piece nestled inside. ‘I’m gonna be glad to be able to sleep without having to rest my head on top of this stupid thing again.’

With a sway of his tail and a bouncy few steps, Blitzer made his way over to the entrance. “Then we should be all ready.”

“We sure should be-”

George’s ears perked up. Something shifted in the branches above; he poked his head up. Nothing but leaves rustling against one another, doing their best to shield the damp grass from the warmth of the sun. Despite this, he couldn’t shake off the feeling that they were being watched.

“George?” Blitzer poked him on the shoulder. “You okay there?”

The Oshawott shook his head and flattened his ears. “Yeah, sorry about that,” he said, somewhat disappointed in himself. He’d known Blitzer for too long to doubt his word. That Charmander was one hundred percent confident in both of their abilities, which left George wondering what his own reservations were for. Leftover paranoia from yesterday, or some strange Pokemon instinct he didn’t understand. That’s what he wrote it off as, whether it was true or not.

“Come, let’s go.”

* * *​

“Huff, huff, did you manage to find them, Vli?”

“Sort of. They went into the Mystery Dungeon before I could see much, though.”

“But, please tell me, you didn’t see things wrong, right? Gareda will have our heads if we screw this up.”

“Luffy, I know what I saw. That’s got to be the piece of the Azure Flute that Oshawott had in his scarf, I’m a hundred percent sure.”

“Why would they be carrying it into the woods?”

“I don’t know, maybe they’re… oh no, they’re probably going to hand it off to the Alliance in there. Crap, and we can’t just go in there after ‘em, either.”

“Wh-wh-what?! What are we going to tell Gareda? I… She’ll, she’ll never forgive me…us.”

“Calm yourself, Luffy. We’re the only ones who’ve been seeing things, right? We can say whatever we like. Just omit the details that’ll make her want to kill us, and then we’ll be golden.”

“But I don’t want to lie to her. It’s not right.”

“I don’t like it either. We don’t have a choice in this. Just do as I tell you, okay? We’ll get her to direct her rage at this town, we’ve got some dirt on that ghost in the café too, don’t we.”

* * *​

A wind stirred through the forest as George and Blitzer began making their way to the central meadow. The woods seemed strangely tranquill this time around. Whereas bugs would ordinarily be leering in from the branches overhead, waiting for unfortunate travellers to descend upon, today they weren’t anywhere to be seen, heard, or smelled. Aside from wet grass and bark, and a few plants that reeked of earth, George’s nose was empty. He thumbed it repeatedly, but no dice.

“Looks like the bugs all went on vacation.”

“What’s a vacation?”

George smacked himself on the forehead. ‘Here we go again.’ “A break from work. Or school.”

Blitzer spun his head around. “Break? Wait, do humans not get breaks from work?”

“No,” George muttered, “what I’m saying is that we usually do our thing all week long, and occasionally we get a break from it. A week or two, something like that. I’m still young, so I was lucky enough to also get six weeks back to back in the summers-”

“Whaaat?” Blitzer jumped around, almost setting a bush on fire with a careless sway of his tail. “You mean that you never get real time off from having to work? Only in the summer?” the Charmander stumbled backwards, brushing his brow with an arm as he spun back to face the path ahead. “And I thought we had it difficult.”

The former human pressed his tongue into a cheek. “It’s not that bad, really.” ‘Not when the alternative is being kicked around by others.’

“Oh no,” the Charmander chirped on further. “We still don’t know how you managed to come to our world, but you made the right decision, I’m telling you! I’d be miserable being cooped up all day in school.”

To this, George had but a single, drawn out sigh to give. ‘Me too.’

Blitzer continued to stumble on forwards, humming to himself while paying little attention to the bounce in his steps. His tail now bounced with the rest of his body, which seemed to be effective at keeping him from keeling over flat on his face, silly as it may look. Effective enough to keep him focused on what was in front, at least. He hummed along to the peaceful crackling of his tail flame and the crunching of the gravel underneath both of their feet.

“Hm, it is very quiet here today though, you’re right. Haha, I guess they are all ‘on vacation’!” Blitzer stretched his arms. “Where’d they all go?”

Behind him, George shrugged with his shoulders. “That’s what I’m wondering,” he said as he stepped on a branch.

“Well, I know I’m not complaining. Makes this a little easier, don’t you agree?”

“Of course.” George breathed in deep. ‘Surely there must be some Pokemon around here. Why would they just have disappeared like that?’

The solemn woods continued onwards. They made their way through thin, bendy trails, over the remnants of long fallen trees and their dull mushrooms, past a stream here and there, stopping to skip a pebble over the water every now and then. Small clearings, thorny paths, the woods weren’t anything like the times they’d been here in the few weeks prior. The ‘Mystery Dungeon effect’ is what Blitzer called it. The inexplicable shuffling, merging, and twisting of the space. It had no clear boundary; you simply ‘felt’ like you were in one. But wouldn’t it be easy to get lost in this no man’s land? Every turn was simple, yet confusing. You wouldn’t know if you were getting out or going deeper. You’re all alone. Lost. Feral Pokemon might be lurking nearby. There’d be no one to save you from them if you couldn’t handle them. George swallowed his saliva as he passed yet another turn through scorched thorns. The presence of that sign at the entrance made a lot more sense now.

Fortunately for the two of them, Greenwood Forest wasn’t the worst of it. A grand shimmer of light appeared uphill in the distance. “There it is, George!” Blitzer exclaimed as he took off with a burst of speed, his wobbling having calmed for the moment, “it’s the center!”

“How do you know that?”

“Come on! I’ve been here like a thousand times, of course I know it!”

Following the burning tail uphill, George was surprised, then relieved to find out that Blitzer had been right. The meadow and all its colourful, petalrich flowers were in full bloom, glistering in the sunlight. Once again the nudge to go frolicking in the fields was overwhelming, and George couldn’t help but skip through the flowers a little, bugs and grass Pokemon be damned. It was a bright, sunny day; in that moment, everything seemed alright, and all worries he had melted away as if they were ice.

While George skipped around and sent petals flying without a care in the world, Blitzer was watching from afar, snickering behind his back. “You just couldn’t resist, could you?”

Now halfway across the field, George stopped in a crowd of goldenrods, tail and scarf swinging in the pollen-filled breeze. “Hey, we’re here now, might as well enjoy it, right?”

Blitzer nodded right back. “True! I’ve done it too many times to count myself! But remember what we’re here for this time! I know where the stump is.”

George tilted his head. “Huh. I thought I remembered that much, but I can’t find it in all these flowers.”

“Just follow me, George, I’ve got a nose for these things!” ‘He does? With a face that flat?’

Blitzer pushed his way through the flowers, motioning for George to follow. He was paying extra care to keep his tail pitched up: The last thing either of them wanted was for a fire to start, and aside from George, who was going to be able to put it out? The sight would be gone, just like that. A few steps into the meadow, at a spot where a streak of rad was interrupted by a patch of purple, even pitching the tail didn’t sit right - Blitzer grabbed it and held it up to his head, in a way that wouldn’t be pleasant upon human skin.

Somewhere in the back of the meadow, the stump stood on a slightly raised bed. The flowers grew right up to its roots, their stature and aroma masking the wood from being seen at a distance. It seemed lonely, kept away from its kind by the floral invaders, and also from the sight of others.

“Here we are. You still have the flute, right?”

“Yeah,” George said under his breath, ears going flat as he ran a hand over the wooden surface. When he reached into the folds of his scarf to do as had been asked, he hesitated. The pattern in the stump was something questionable; spikes ran from the bark up to a streak of alternating dark and light in the middle.. A field trip had taught him that the pattern was supposed to consist of rings; As the tree grew in age, so did the rings. Yet this wasn’t that.

A pair of fingers tapped the back of the Oshawott’s neck. His muscles tensed in an instant. “George? Are you going to put it down, or what?”

“S-sorry,” George said.

“Something wrong?”

“No, it’s just, I dunno. I was thinking of going to the woods back home all of a sudden. We did something similar.”

“Oh yeah, makes sense.” Blitzer replied. George sighed, and put the flute piece down on the stump. Back home, he’d been glad to get rid of it. All the times it had disrupted his sleep made him want to miss it like a rotten tooth. Now out in the middle of the woods, however, he struggled letting go. He thought of home, the room he shared with Blitzer. Or rather, Blitzer’s room, that just so happened to be the room he was staying in as well. And not even that, he thought of the foster’s home. The bed that wasn’t his, whether sheet or straw. The toys that weren’t his, whether plastic or wooden. In a way, the flute they found was something that was truly ‘his’. Something to call his own. Yet here he was, getting rid of it. More than that, he felt worried. A fear that something would happen if he left the flute here, instead of just taking it back home.

In the end though, a promise is a promise. George put the flute down, and turned away. “That was that, I guess…”

“It sure was. Pretty easy, wasn’t it?”

“Yeah.”

Blitzer put his arm around George’s back as they walked away from the stump. “We’ve sure gotten stronger, haven’t we, George? This forest was still pretty intimidating the first time we went in, and now it’s a joke!” he chirped to a surge of crackles. “Once my parents are all calmed down, we can look for something bigger. Broader! So much to see out there, I barely even know where to start!”

While Blitzer rambled on for a while longer about the same dreams he’d been sharing for over a month now, George’s lips were sealed. Something didn’t feel right. No, a lot didn’t feel right. Not one bit. He could feel it. He could taste it. A bitter sensation spread through his body, gradually intensifying with each step they took. Skin shivered. Hairs rustled. Muscles tensed. His spine flared up as if it had been clamped down upon. By the time they were back at the mouth of the clearing, it had strengthened past the point where it could be brushed aside. His mind raced. He had to say something.

“Blitzer…?”

“Yeah?”

“I don’t feel so good.”

“Huh? Did you catch something in the field just now? We haven’t even run into anything yet.”

George’s stomach twisted into a knot. It wasn’t mere sickness. What he felt was a presence. The kind of presence one never wanted to feel nearby. He peered over his shoulder, and gasped at what he saw.

“N-no, I didn’t catch anything, but we’re about to be catched ourselves!!”
 
Chapter 27

Gyeig

Junior Trainer
Pronouns
he/him
Partners
  1. samurott

Chapter 27 - Shadows​


Words to describe that which they were looking at wouldn’t express enough. Right above the meadow floated the shape of a Pokemon. It had a small, imp like body and a large head resembling a ladybug’s shell. The Pokemon, whose eyebrows resembled an Orbeetle’s, looked as if smothered in dark blue ink, in spite of the sun’s blessed light beaming down upon it. All its colours of its body had been dimmed to a near unrecognisable monochrome. The eyes had taken on a reddish purple glow, burying the pupils and irises under a sinister mask devoid of any emotion. All they did was stare lifelessly ahead, straight through the souls of the Oshawott and Charmander staring at the Pokemon in wide-jawed horror.

Before either of them had the chance to move, the Orbeetle threw its mouth open, releasing an ear-piercingly sharp hiss that stung George and Blitzer deep. Like the stinger of a Beedrill burrowing into its prey, it pierced their ears, kicking up a terrible headache in them both. An instinct sent George’s hand flying towards his scalchop. They weren’t leaving without a fight.

“Graah! You’ll pay for that, you creepy insectoid!”

Blitzer reeled backwards and spat out a glob of flame. The Orbeetle flicked its body sidewards: The fireball hit nothing but a shadowy trail that looked like black vapour. Blitzer looked stunned. The Orbeetle stretched its arms out over its large head; a giant ball of purple materialised above, and flung it at them. They jumped sidewards away from each other; an explosion hit the spot they were standing at, scraping past their hides and sending shrapnels of dirt flying through the air

“Aah!”

Coughing and sputtering from the taste of dirt, George got back up. No time to check up on Blitzer; the Orbeetle readied to strike again. He jumped the gun and pulled on his aquatic energies, spitting out a solid stream of water in the shadowy Pokemon’s general vicinity. It connected, to little effect. The ladybug Pokemon took the attack head on. It shrugged it off like mere drops of rain, then threw back its arms to retaliate. The purple glow in its eyes strengthened. A droning sound through the meadow and nearby forest. George could feel the beat of his heart under his ribs. Everywhere he could run, the attack would follow him. His instincts told him to run, yet he couldn’t. With eyes wide open, he watched as the Orbeetle threw its arms ahead, sending a beam crackling through the air straight towards him. A streak of orange jumped into the corner of his eye. Yelping, he was slammed onto his belly, sliding to a stop while clutching his scalchop tight in his hand.

“Argh!”

George rolled onto his back to see Blitzer standing beside him, sucking in a deep breath through his nose before spitting out a mixture of blue and red fire. A cry sounded in the distance. Blitzer closed his mouth and sighed with relief, then panted as he pulled George back onto two feet.

“You alright there?”

“Yeah, I think so… what was that?!”

“I don’t know! I’ve never seen anything like it! What’s with that glow in its eyes?”

“Glow? How about everything else?!”

George gritted his teeth and looked ahead into the meadow. The Orbeetle had landed somewhere in the back, its inky aura visible even from afar. It was stroking the blackened side of its head with one of its arms. It must have been nursing a burn, but just when they had thought they’d seen it all, the arm took on a black glow. The sound of sludge being smeared over an object crept into their ears, and for a brief second it felt as if they were smelling it too. Tasting it, even.

“What’s it doing…” Blitzer’s tail lashed back and forth nervously. George narrowed his eyes, then sucked a breath in between his teeth at what he saw. Black was turning blue.

“It’s healing itself!”

Blitzer shifted a foot backwards. “H-healing?! Is that even possible?”

George slapped his tail. “I don’t know, but I’m not sticking around here just to find out!” he exclaimed, then ran past the ridge and back into the Mystery Dungeon as fast as he could. His mind was racing. That shadow. Those eyes. That glow. The strength. Its resistance. Those sounds. What on earth was happening?

“Hey! Wait up, what if there’s more?” Blitzer yelled after George, who reflexively stopped dead in his tracks. “No! Keep going! Just don’t leave me!”

George grimaced. “Okay, just hurry up!” he exclaimed back.

It didn’t take long for Blitzer to catch up. Side by side they ran, desperately hoping that shadow wouldn’t follow. Still George felt the glare of those glowing eyes. They were out for blood. Their blood. It wasn’t a feral defending its territory, or a mugger back home demanding money at the point of a knife. Not a chance in hell. Adrenaline surged through their veins and boosted their legs; Blitzer even had his odd walk under control.

Ten minutes later, Blitzer pointed towards a tree just off the path. Without giving George a chance to voice his own thoughts, he crashed down onto his belly, heavily panting and clutching his head. Even if George wanted to protest, he was too exhausted. A prickling remnant of the attacks had forced its way into his body, as if each hair had been absorbing and letting them run rampant inside. Stranger things had been seen today.

George flopped backwards against the tree, his scarf loosening up after getting caught on a pointy shard of bark. Looking back the way they came, the coast seemed clear for now. But this was a world where eyes weren’t necessarily arbiters of the truth. Least of all now.

“What on earth was that…”

Blitzer rolled onto his back, letting his tail scorch some grass in the process. It didn’t take long before the smoky smell filled the air. “I’ve been running through this dungeon before I could even spit fire properly. Never, ever did I see anything like it.”

George clutched an arm over his chest, eyes shiftily going back and forth over the surrounding area in search of anything else that might be considered a threat. “Please tell me that’s a lie.”

“It’s not.”

“But… how? How is that even possible?”

Blitzer sighed. “I wish I knew the answer to that myself, George. I really do.” He had to hold up his head with one of his claws, whose white tips had gotten longer. George felt strangely compelled to look, as if some force was ordering him to, even though said struggle was anything but pretty. “Ugh, this is the worst time to have a headache…”

“That’s the umpteenth headache this week,” George said, scratching the side of his head. ‘And they’re getting worse too, looks like. Ugh, am I going to get these as well eventually?’

The Charmander angrily forced himself to sit upright. “Yeah, and I’m long past the point of being tired of them, I’m about ready to rip the legs off a Zubat! Ugh, why can’t these damn cramps just go away already? I try to fight, or anything basic at all, and they get worse!”

George pressed his back further against the tree, one eye drawn to a shifty patch of leaves deeper into a murky stretch of woods. “We should take a break from exploring. If we’re making it out of here alive, anyway.”

Blitzer winced as he processed what George had said? “What do you mean, ‘alive’? Of course we’re going to make it out alive, we’ve done it so many times before that I lost count. It’s a no brainer,” he said, trying to play it off like they hadn’t gotten themselves stuck in far more than they had ever bargained for. Of course, the body spoke a far more honest tongue. Nary a shred of confidence was visible in his slouched posture, or audible in his shaky breath. The cramps weren’t helping, of course. George lowered his head.

“That was before that… thing ever showed its face, wasn’t it.”

“Yeah…” Blitzer shook his head. “I’ve seen Orbeetle before, but nothing like this. One lives in the village, too. They’re tough enough, but-”

“That energy… I swear, I’ve felt it before,” George then said. Blitzer twitched his tail around in surprise.

“What is that supposed to mean?”

“I don’t know… it feels… familiar…” George said. An odd sense of deja vu had overcame him. He couldn’t explain it. All he could picture in his head was a pond. Then, a sharp sensation overwhelmed his gut. Imagining the energy wasn’t necessary anymore. It was staring him dead in the eye.

“b-Blitzer!! Run!!”

There was scant time to so much as blink. Blitzer’s head twisted just in time to see a swarm of blackened Spinarak skitter out of the bushes, their eyes glowing purple with a burning rage. The charmander gasped and kicked the ground: Chunks of muddy dirt split from the ground and pelted the spiders with the strength of the earth. The spiders shook themselves clean, brown turning to dark blue as they skittered ever closer to the Charmander whose mouth was now blazing.

A stream of fire roared through the woods. The cry was joined by a screech. George got up and took his scalchop into his hand. His heart pounded. A spider screeched; dark wings broke between the bushes with the speed of a drone. The shape of a Dustox emerged - and far more was on the horizon. It was as if the whole forest had woken from hibernation: Paras crawled in the distance, Dwebble emerged from behind pebbles. Caterpies, Weedles, Wurmples, every bug in the forest was sliding off the bark or through the grass, their carapaces gleaming with shadows. George bit his lip, and tightened his grip on the scalchop. The thought of running wasn’t even an idea anymore.

‘Focus, George… you can do this!’

The Oshawott tapped into his energy, hydrating his throat and stomach. The Dustox wings skittered with yellow pollen. George spat a blast of water square at its head, and hit the bullseye - the Dustox screeched as it was thrown back against a tree with enough force to send scraps of bark flying. Seeing his handy work as adrenaline pumped through his veins, George couldn’t resist the urge to smile.

‘Yeah. I did that.’

A current of flame scorched past into the push. Two Spinarak and a Weedle were left wildly flailing their flamed limbs around, weakly releasing their agonized hisses for their kin to hear, their now roasted bodies polluting the air with a noxious scent. The other bugs marching through the woods did not relent. Kricketunes whistled in the distance. Sewaddles and Sizzlipedes, Scatterbugs and Venipedes all crawled from burrows and thickets, each bearing their shadowy bodies towards the corpses of the other bugs, their hollow purple eyes eyeing the two as if they were objects. As if they were nothing. Space to be crawled through. Pebbles to crush. Food to be eaten. Blitzer spat and scorched all he could, and George brought a torrent down upon their heads, drowning the darkness out with a fury that seemed blessed by Kyogre itself.

So many fell. Burnt to a crisp, blasted to smithereens. But there were more. So many more. Too many to count. The ever growing mound of bugs was naught compared to the anger of their brethren. Their evolved forms fluttered through the branches. They crept past sidewards, claws and mandibles yearning to pounce from the back - it was a losing battle. Nothing demoralised this enemy. Nothing gave them second thoughts, not the ones missing their legs, not the ones twitching weakly, not the ones who had become part ash. The darkness that surrounded their bodies grew ever darker, and the glow of their eyes only intensified with the burning hatred and thirst for blood. George and Blitzer were aghast. The glow. The sound of a thousand bugs skittering. The stench of ash and innards.

How long had this gone on? How long could it even go on? The sea of bugs was endless. Everlasting. Drops of rain that stuck together to form a mighty storm. Blitzer and George, for the first time since the bugs had begun to crawl out of the woodworks, looked each other in the eye.

“...run!”

They turned their tail just as the wings above beat rapidly into a deep wind. Pollen scattered through the air. “Hold your breath!” Blitzer shouted, mouth half buried under one arm. George covered his mouth, but forgot to pinch his nose shut in the midst of the fog of war. A poisonous rash spread inside of him. It didn’t take long before his lungs began to feel like they were being squeezed by a large hand. A cough shot its way out of his throat. “HAGH!...Ngggh,” George hacked and uttered. A stinging sensation crept up his arms: He felt another cough brew inside of him before it shot up to his mouth as well.

“Haghh!”

“g-George! Did you breathe?”

“Y-yes- Ack!” Pain pulsed through George’s body k. Blitzer had gotten some distance on him, even with his wobbly steps.

“Just keep running! Hold on!”

They made their way back from where they came, pursued by winged shadows at every step. The path in front of George was dreary. His nose was ablaze: breathing had slathered pollen all across his respiratory system, and it made the mere act of drawing breath painful. Exhausting. Like sticking sour dip up a nostril, somehow going deep enough to reach the lung. How he wished it was just that much. Nothing more than an innocent mistake. His feet alone told him he was making progress. Cool grass or coarse dirt; neither seemed preferable. A wave of heat passed over him on occasion. It might have been Blitzer breathing fire. Was it? Nothing seemed certain anymore. The poison slowly gnawed away at him. The chattering of insectoid wings flattened his ears. He needed help, fast.

And that help would come from an unlikely source: An actual source, as a matter of fact. They reached the stream they had crossed on their way into the woods. From the first touch of cool water embracing his feet, a wave of clarity washed over. The pain lifted. The haze in his eyes dispersed, and the energy in his body surged. Out of the blue, he felt incredibly happy.

“g-George! What are you doing, they’re coming right for you!!”

The burst in energy couldn’t have come at a better time, for a Dustox and a Vivillion coated in dark blue shadows had caught up. He shifted his feet against the flow of the stream, letting the water wash over. The haze lifted. “I can handle this,” he shouted back to the fearful voice calling out to him. He didn’t pay attention to the response. Standing here, he had all the strength he needed.

“Here goes… NOTHNG!”

Water surged from his mouth and spat forth with the power of a cannon. The Dustox and the Vivillion didn’t know what had hit them: They scarcely uttered a cry before their tiny, shadowy bodies were thrown around like ragdolls, chips of their wings shattered and separated from the rest fluttering to the ground and losing their shadow. George heaved and dropped to his knees. The poison continued to do a number on him. Even then, he smiled.

‘That’s for the poison, you Pokemon sons of…’

Having seen George stand his ground, only to fall regardless, Blitzer rushed back to the stream with a tense breath, almost tripping over a bump in the road in the process. He reached for George’s arm and pulled him back to his feet, spilling hot breaths over the back of his head in the process.

“George? George! Are you alright?”

The human turned Oshawott had but a weak nod to give. “Yeah.”

“They’ve got you good… damnit, we’ve stuck around here for too long,” Blitzer grumbled with a swish of his tail, eyes turned to the path ahead. The horizon was clear. For now. “Come, we need to go. There’s some wild Pechas I saw on the way here closeby, c’mon.”

The thought of eating anything made George’s stomach churn harder than it already was. “I’m good, thank you… hagh!”

“No, you’re not! You’re poisoned, and we’re stuck here in the woods! Pechas are great against poison George, trust me! You’ve gotta eat one before you faint out here!” Blitzer yelled, tugging on George’s arm with enough force to catch George off guard.

“Ah!”

“Come on, I don’t want to get eaten by monster bugs either!”

George’s head throbbed, making it hard to think straight. The haze returned to his eyes; it wasn’t until now that George realised that Blitzer had pulled his feet out of the stream. Anything scarce of blasting the Charmander in the face with water wouldn’t be able to reverse that. So he left himself to Blitzer’s wims, clutching his head with the hand that wasn’t being dragged off.

“It’s around here somewhere, I swear. Damnit, don’t tell me now is the time to get lost…”

Blitzer grumbled to himself between steps. George didn’t reply, too busy keeping his own feet steady through the burning in his body, all while trying to avoid being burned by the tail swinging back and forth less than spitting distance away. He had to bite his lips. There weren’t any Pechas on the road back, none that he could see. A few berries, perhaps, but none as pink as they needed to be. This wasn’t the time to create false hope. George wasn’t angered. The aching and coughing sucked up all the energy needed to be angry. Then the urge to spew up joined in.

“There, there it is!”

A tug on George’s arm sent a chain reaction into motion. Arm, throat, mouth, stomach. Something was rising. George felt himself growing pale. ‘Oh no. Please no.’ His feet dragged on the floor. His stomach burned, his throat followed. It came. It came fast. He choked on his breath, then keeled over forwards. With a hack, a stream of green water drizzled from his mouth, hitting the ground with a smack and spattering over his legs. The sudden keeling caused Blitzer to yelp and stumble, letting go of George’s arm, face planting into the dirt just before a tiny tree with pinkish berries attached to it. He looked back and gagged: George was laying on the ground, the once white fur on his face dripping with a foul-smelling green liquid.

“Oh Arceus almighty that’s disgusting…”

“Nggghh… agh-”

George hacked up a spatter. Unfortunately, he happened to be looking up at Blitzer’s face when it happened. The spatter flew, and Blitzer pulled a sour face: His cream-colored belly now sported a green stain. He hissed between his teeth and clenched his fist; George weakly looked on, seeing a hazy claw come up to his face. He found his mouth being pried open.

“Alright, just eat this up, okay?”

Half of a berry was shoved into his mouth. Sweet, yet rough on the tongue at first, he slowly chewed it into a fine pulp, then swallowed. If it had an aftertaste, George couldn’t tell it apart from the taste of his own vomit. It certainly wasn’t much compared to the pechas Nera had served up. George sighed. He drew breath; the pain in his throat had lessened.

“Hey, how do you feel?” Blitzer asked.

“Alive.” ‘Like I’ve been on a rollercoaster for a week straight, but alive.’

Blitzer breathed out with an excited crackle coming from his tail. “Phew, that was a close one,” he chirped, wiping the puke off his chest. “Do you think you can run?”

George gave the Charmander a dull stare in return. “It’s been five seconds, Blitzer.”
“Yeah, but we need to hurry. More of them are on the way, there has to be.”

George slapped his tail around. “I know that, but… I just need to, hold on…” Slow as a Goomy, he rose back onto two feet. To Blitzer’s credit, the Pecha Berry seemed to be doing its job; the haze lifted from his eyes, the burning in his lungs and nose ceased, as did the stomach ache become manageable. All that stuck around was the sourness of his stomach acids, much to his displeasure.

“Come on George, I think I see them over there, let’s go!”

* * *​

“There it is. We’ve got what we’ve come for.”

“Uhm, did you notice those ferals there, Skal?”

“Ferals? What ferals?”

“The bugs… they were coated in this black aura.”

“Hm. Didn’t see anything of the sort. Are you sure about that, Terez?”

“Yes, I’m sure of it. What about them, Skal? If those things-“

“Don’t worry. You’ve said it yourself, that lad has all the strength in the world. They’re just bugs. Some magic crap won’t help ‘em much.”

“I hope you’re right…”
 
Chapter 28

Gyeig

Junior Trainer
Pronouns
he/him
Partners
  1. samurott

Chapter 28 - Dim Prospects​


Having escaped the forest, the two raced back towards Greenfield with bated breath. It had seemed like a peaceful day, what with its bright sun and scarce clouds, the gentle breeze and balanced temperature. Yet here they were running for their lives. The bugs had gone silent for a while. They had probably given up the chase by now. If Blitzer’s stories were to be believed, they never strayed far from their home. At least, the ordinary insects wouldn’t.

After running past the sign at the dungeon’s entrance, the question of what in the world they had even seen came rushing up. It was almost like a blur, a figment of the imagination that had gotten out of their control. But the cuts, the lack of energy, and the stains on George’s face were all too real. Something had gone terribly wrong. George’s head was spinning. Even Blitzer was awestruck. Years of visiting this same Mystery Dungeon hadn’t prepared him for what he’d seen. That unnatural, abhorrent force.

On their run back into the village, they were attracting eyes from all over like a village fool would. A fool was amusing, at least. Even with their rushed breathing, clumsy footstes, and the puke on George’s face, the villagers weren’t laughing. Not a smile to be seen, even. Behind the comedic surface was something very bitter. All the bravery from earlier had vanished into thin air, and all he could feel now was fear. Back at the house, he shivered as Blitzer cautiously knocked on the door, the occasional whimper escaping his throat.

‘What the heck was that…’

The door swung open. Nera was on the other side, the expression on her face switching from jolly to shock in the blink of an eye.

“Blitzer? What’s the manne- oh Arceus almighty, what happened to your arms? George, are- Wh-what happened?! You look like you’ve ran straight through a Beedrill hive!”

George took one glance at his arms; several stingers were poking out. Some bugs must’ve snuck up on him. With how many there were back there, he had to have missed some. He exhaled a lungful through his nose, and stared at the back of Blitzer’s head as he put a claw on his belly, unable to look his mother in the eye.

“Mom, we really need to talk with you and dad.”

“You don’t say? What in all of Eravate have you kids been doing?”

“That’s not what I meant-”

“Nero! Come here for a second!”

Shuddering, Blitzer followed his mother into the hovel with light feet, George following behind a short distance away. He put his stinger-covered forearms over his scalchop. This wasn’t going to be pretty.

* * *​

“So, you mean to tell me that you went out playing in the middle of the woods, and you were attacked by these… shadow bugs out of nowhere,” said Nero as he yanked a stinger out of Blitzer’s body.

“Yow! Y-yes, that is very true!” Blitzer chirped, rubbing the spot on his arm. ”They weren’t like ordinary bugs at all, they were huge! They had a black aura around ‘em, and these purple glowing eyes. There were thousands of them, thousands! Insanely strong for bugs, too! I couldn’t bring them down with a little fire like normal,” he rambled. Nero simply rolled his eyes once he was done, and let a dull growl simmer in his throat for a while.

“Right… And this is different than you getting into trouble every week, how?”

“You’ve gotta believe me, dad! George was there with me, he can confirm all of this! Someone has to go and take a look, what if they attack Greenfield one day?”

Nero took one mediocre look at George, then at his wife who was cautiously plucking stingers out of George’s fur, then back to Blitzer.

“Yeah, something tells me you’re exaggerating, lad. Wouldn’t be the first time.”

Blitzer banged his fists on the dinner table they were seated at. “It’s not an exaggeration, it’s how it is! We were attacked by shadowy Pokemon, and they were out for blood! I swear!”

Nero raised a brow. “Just like how you said Lance was ‘possessed’ that one time when you were trampling all over his berry field?”

Blitzer shook his head back and forth. “N-no! Not like that! I mean literally possessed, like they weren’t in control of their own bodies! Sure bugs get angry, but they’re never this out for blood! When have I ever come back this messed up from fighting bugs, dad? This didn’t happen even when I was little!”

Nero sighed. “Have it your way then, son. If you’re so determined to hold onto this little story of yours, then I’ll guess we can go and inform the rest of the town. The weekly medicinal trip will happen tomorrow, won’t it.”

“Weekly medicinal trip?” asked George, hands resting on his feet as Nera kept on pulling stingers out of his arm. The Nidorina leaned up to his ear.

“Oh, it’s a little field expedition to go look for berries and other plants, dear. Medicine is not the easiest to come by out here, and Mystery Dungeons do sometimes produce oddities that are quite good for making medicine.”

“Mystery Dungeons can do that?” George asked.

“They sure can,” Nera replied with a slight smile. “Isn’t it wonderful?”

George gave a gentle nod in response. Greenfield wasn’t a thriving settlement, that much was clear after living here for over a month. Given the state of Agate Township, the rest of the region wasn’t faring much better, in all likelihood. Every little bit must help out, and everyone had to help out. It wasn’t like the city back home with all of its comforts, and all the shadiness and thuggery, everyone here had to toil away if the settlement was going to last. Only the kids were free to mess around all day, some light learning here and there aside.

“But yes, they’re going tomorrow,” Nero said. “I’ll tell ‘em to keep an eye out for your bugs. If they even exist, that is.” He gave a smug chuckle, much to Blitzer’s chagrin.

“Why do you never believe me?”

“You being right about something would be a new one to me, laddie.”

“But it is true.”

“Sure it is. We’ll hear about it tomorrow, won’t we?”

Their argument trudging along like a cart through a bog, Nera let go of the stinger she was pulling out of George’s arm and slammed her foreleg onto the table. “Cut it out, both of you,” she said, then shook her head. “Blitzer, honey, I’m willing to believe you, but do you realise what this means?”

Blitzer nodded. “Yes, that something bad is happening in the-”

“No, not that,” Nera said, defiantly turning her head away from the Charmander. “You won’t like hearing this, but we’ve once again let you go too far. First you get into trouble in a cave, then the Soldiers come, and now these shadowy bug Pokemon. It’s only getting more dangerous out there. We can’t keep letting you run off like this.”

For a few agonising seconds, it was quiet enough in the house to hear a pin drop. George felt a shiver pass through spine. ‘This again.’ he thought to himself, swallowing his saliva as the nerves creeped back up.

“Mom, no, don’t say that,” Blitzer pouted, his facial expression having become a sour mixture of anger and fear. Nera put her paw down on the table, thumping it several times as if banging a gavel.

“It is what it is, son. You’re putting yourself and your friend in danger out there. Look at how much he’s been stung!” She hovered her paw over the spots in George’s arm.

Blitzer gritted his teeth. “He’s still new to this, mom! You know that!”

“Yeah, and that’s why he shouldn’t be going out there,” Nero continued from behind Blitzer, wiping the Charmander’s arms with a wet rag. “You’re bad enough as is. He? Looks like he’s about to drop cold any second.”

Deafening silence is what Blitzer replied with. George, feeling the need to do something that wasn’t sitting there and fiddling with his scalchop, raised a hand into the air. “Sir, I feel fine.”

Nero chortled right back at him, as if everything was all a joke gone out of control. “Come on, laddie, you believe that yourself? Look at your face. You reek of vomit, kid. You were poisoned, weren’t ya?” he said with a wink. George reeled back against Nera’s chest.

“Wh-what? No, I-”

“Yes you were. Why are you even bothering to hide it? Nera and I are both of poison, come on now. We know this crap like it's breathing.”

George sighed. “Yeah, you’re right. It was poison, I guess.”

“From a Dustox,” Nero added, then tilted his head. “Look, l;ad. I know this ain’t easy for you to hear, but you’re little. The world is big and dangerous, and you don’t even know the beginnings of it. We’re not letting you run around like that. We don’t want to find either of you dead one day, alright? Or worse. What if someone discovers who you truly are? It’s not every day someone from another world comes to visit.”

It seemed so innocent on the surface, yet Blitzer wasn’t having any of it. He stomped his feet down at the base of the stool he was sitting on, a sudden spark from his tail almost catching Nero by his horn, eliciting a low yelp in the process.

“HEY! Watch it there, mister! What did I tell you about keeping that fire of yours under control!” Nero tried putting a lone finger against Blitzer’s chest; the Charmander smacked it away.

“Dad, how many times have you told me I’ll have to get out into the world someday? You can’t keep me locked in here forever, you admitted as much!”

Nero rubbed the finger against his flank. “Blegh, it’s that time alright,” he said, then kept his mouth shut. Nera took over for him.

“Son, right now is not the time,” she said with a pained expression. “It’s not getting better anytime soon. And besides, you have the cramps.”

Blitzer frowned. “I know that. You’ve never even told me what the cramps even are, other than suddenly being unable to walk like normal.”

To this, Nera couldn’t help but crack a smile, just like the last time Blitzer had mentioned the achings all over his body. To make matters worse, his father too struggled to suppress a loud belly laugh; the frown on his face grew deeper.

“What’s so funny?!”

“Nothing, son, it’s just, it’s just that you’re taking this very hard, you know? Not how I was thinkin’ you’d react to the cramps, hahahahaha…” Nero chuckled. A faint shimmer shone in his eyes. George bit at his cheek.

‘Is it really that funny? He’s having problems walking.’

Blitzer’s tail flared up: Nero was ready for it this time. “Do you know how painful this is? I can’t even walk without my legs itching. Or sleep without feeling like I got hit over the head!” he exclaimed. Nero shook his head.

“Lad, me and your mother both experienced this too, it’ll go away, and you’ll be glad. More than that, even. Patience.” The Nidorino cleared his throat. “Ahem. Enough of this jabber. I’ll go and ask the gatherers to keep an eye out for your shadows, yes? ”

Blitzer stared out in front of him with clenched fists, having let his teeth slip out of his jaw out of frustration. He didn’t say a word. Neither did George, who was looking out of a window. He was fortunate the sun wasn’t shining through at this time. Their sudden disinterest in the conversation wasn’t going unnoticed, and Nero was having none of it.

“Cut the attitude. You wanted this, didn’t you?”

“...yes,” Blitzer huffed back after a few seconds. Nero wasn’t impressed.

“Unclench your damn fists, Blitzer. If I were you, I’d be up praying to Jirachi wishing that the gathering team won’t see whatever’s got you all panicked, you hear?”

“Yes…” Blitzer said with a soft growl.

“Good.”

After the parents had finished taking care of George and Blitzer’s injuries, the two went about their day with sizable reservations. In times like these, it was hard to be optimistic about much of anything. Either they’d look like idiots or they’d be locked indoors. Blitzer didn’t seem to care about the latter anymore, though. Despite all his fears of that happening a few days earlier, he seemed very eager to prove a point this time around. George went to bed that night with throbbing head, even with the flute piece now gone. The argument wasn’t even a drop of rain in the storm. What about that horrible rash that had captivated those ferals so? It was left unchecked, yet Nero and Nera shrugged it off like it was nothing. What if it spread to the settlement? Who was going to stop it?

* * *​

One day later, the gatherers returned from their trip just as the sun peaked in the sky. There were four Pokemon among them: A Poliwhirl, a Roselia, a Simisage and a Fearow.

“What do you mean, you didn’t find the shadowy bugs? They were everywhere just a day ago!”

A Poliwhirl at the front looked off past the Charmander stomping the dirt right in front of him. “Sorry lad, but I did not see anything out of the ordinary. We found a few bugs, yes, but none of them had shadows or purple eyes. Nothing else of the sort, either. It was peaceful in there, all things considered.”

Blitzer’s mouth fell half open. “What, no, this, no, you’re not, this,” he stammered. A purple foreleg patted him on the back.

“See? Told you it was going to be nonsense. My son doesn’t like admitting he was wrong, you know ‘im, Todi.”

The Poliwhirl’s belly swirl appeared to twist around a little. “Oh yes, we all know, Nero.”

“But I saw it too,” George said. The Poliwhirl tapped the upper part of the swirl on his belly.

“Who is this, Nero?”

“Oh, just Blitzer’s friend. He’s a bumpkin from the north, don’t mind him.”

The Poliwhirl tapped the right side of the swirl. “Sure. If you don’t mind, we’ve got some goods to deliver, yes?”

Nero nodded. “Oh yes, don’t let me stop you,” he said. And just like that, the gatherers were on their way. Nero patted Blitzer on his back a few times, before turning homewards. “See? Knew you were making this up again,” he chuckled.

“But… I know what I saw… It’s not a joke…” Blitzer said, gritting his teeth. His posture disintegrated into a slouch. Nero turned his back on the two of them, still laughing at Blitzer’s expense.

“Evidently, you didn’t. Son, it’s okay to say you stumbled into a Beedrill’s nest by accident, you know. Sure, I’ll still tell you to watch what you’re doing, because you have a knack of forgetting that, even with that little bundle of freckles you brought home standing next to you. And that’s fine, ‘s just the way you are. No need to hide that with some vague story about shadowy Pokemon that aren’t real, you know. Chin up, eh? You should mess around with your friends.”

The Nidorino walked back homewards without a second glance back. Only George watched as he disappeared over the bridge and up the hill, arms folded and a frown smeared over his face. Wind blew through his fur, making it stand up a little in the process.

“I don’t get it… we weren’t hallucinating yesterday, were we?”

Blitzer’s legs buckled. He sat down on the dirt, both hands on his head, like he’d usually do when a cramp-induced headache came rushing up. Whether this was another case of that, George didn’t know. The air around Blitzer had a slight smell of ash to it. Sure, it always smelled a little smoky around him, but this wasn’t the same. Whatever the cause, it didn’t give him any confidence in the Charmander’s emotional state.

‘Was his dad normally this rude and dismissive before I arrived here?’

George pinched himself on the arm. “No we weren’t. And how is that even possible, anyway? We’re not the same, yet we both know what we saw.”

Blitzer sighed. “Maybe it was something we ate beforehand, I don’t know,” he muttered.

“Wouldn’t your parents be hallucinating then as well?” George asked.

“I don’t know,” Blitzer replied, tail curled protectively around his side. The frown on George’s face grew deeper. The sun was coming out from behind the clouds: This wasn’t the time to hunker down and sulk. Back home, he’d be lucky to see the sun much at all, let alone be able to enjoy its presence for long before someone would scold him for staring out of the window.

“Are you okay?”

“Not really.” Blitzer ran a claw over the back of another, his eyes half closed off as he was inflicting scratch marks upon his own skin. The very tip of his tail would bob up and down over the dirt, as if petting it like a kitten. “I should pray to Jirachi more.”

“Who’s Jirachi?” George asked. The name sounded familiar, somehow. Blitzer hummed a dull note in return.

“A Pokemon that makes wishes come true, that’s all. Maybe they can make my parents stop treating me like I just came out of my egg.”

Blitzer titled his head away slightly. George felt a cramp of his own and reached for his scalchop, biting his lip as he took it off.

‘This is bad. He won’t even talk about his own world now. How can I even help him out like this? I can’t just say it’ll get better, can I? It never does. But I can’t say nothing, either. Ugh, some great friend I am…’

George started to taste the bitterness of defeat as well. That Charmander always had his back, no questions asked. This was the time to return the favour, and yet he couldn’t. He was reminded of back home all of a sudden, until he tasted pain and iron in his mouth.

It was then a shade was cast over them both.

“Excuse me, do you have a moment?”

George and Blitzer looked out of their miseries to see a Magmar standing over them. She had her claws clasped out in front of her chest, and what appeared to be a smile stretched over her snout; George didn’t know for sure. But the green band wrapped around the Pokemon’s forearm left no margin for error.

“What do you want?” Blitzer asked, his throat producing a soft rumble as he spoke. Compared to the flow of the stream close by, it stood out. The Magmar nodded, no, bowed in return.

“Oh, not much, laddie. I’m just a little lost, and I can’t help but notice a fellow Ruby native when eyes meet! I’d love to stay and talk a little, but I’m afraid my commander wouldn’t like that very much. So uh, do you happen to know where the cafe is?”

Blitzer said nothing back, preferring fidgeting with his claws over telling a soldier much of anything. George kept his scalchop tight in his hands, his tail inkling to start slapping the ground whenever George would allow it to.

‘Who does she think she is, asking us for help? She was with that creepy shark dragon too, wasn’t she? Like all the other Soldiers.’

After about ten seconds without receiving a response, the Magmar turned her overly cheery gaze across the stream. “Hm, is it over here and up the hill?” she said, pointing in the direction of the hovel.

“No, that’s where I live,” Blitzer angrily chirped.

“Oh, my apologies,” the Magmar said. “Uh, would it be to the right, then?”

“...Yes,” Blitzer said in a dull tone.

“Ah, thank you! Have a grand ol’ day, laddie!”

As fast as she had come, the Magmar disappeared over the bridge. George put a hand on his face. The inside was hotter than the outside, even with the burning tail waving by not far. He shot a glance at Blitzer, who simply stared out in front of him.

“I’d like to forget this day ever happened.”

“Shall we go back to the others?” George asked Blitzer, hoping to cheer him up a little. He seemed on the verge of tears.

“I guess,” Blitzer said with a huff, taking his tail into his hands. “If my body allows me to. The cramps in my head got worse. I feel them in my tail now, too.” He shook his head. “ I don’t get it. How can all those shadowy bugs have disappeared? And why were they even like that in the first place? They’re never covered in black… vapour, whatever it was.”

George looked off to a sky greying in the distance. It wasn’t going to be so pleasant for much longer.

“I wish I knew the answer myself.”
 

Spiteful Murkrow

Busy Writing Stories I Want to Read
Pronouns
He/Him/His
Partners
  1. nidoran-f
  2. druddigon
  3. swellow
  4. quilava-fobbie
  5. sneasel-kate
  6. heliolisk-fobbie
Heya, stopping by for a quick double-feature review of your story. I know that you’ve been a bit disappointed at how many reviews you’ve gotten back during this event, and you were really generous in the amount of feedback you gave me over the past couple weeks, so I figured those were good enough reasons to come back to this before Review Blitz ended this year.

Anyhow, we left off on a bit of a cliffhanger last time, so let’s see where that picked up from, hm?

Chapter 8

A serpentine tail stuck out from the bushes. Blitzer and George froze upon spotting it. They weren’t alone out here, and it wasn’t long before their presence went noticed. A scaled head arose from the bushes, a hawkish glare aimed straight at the two.

“...What are you kids doing out here?”

A Druddigon walked into view, an annoyed growl rumbling in his throat. He too had a basket in his hands, filled to the brim with berries sporting a rainbow of colours.

Ah yes, you have a Bestigon in your story. Now I really need to come back to this story in the future.
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“Wait, Lance?” Blitzer’s arms hung in disbelief. “Is that you?”

>Lance

Wait, was the allusion to the Dragon Tamer character from mainline deliberate? Or a happy accident?

The corners of the Druddigon’s mouth went up, revealing the largest teeth in his mouth. “Of course it’s me, you little fool! Who else do you think I was, your grandma?”

I mean, just saying, you and Blitzer do share an Egg Group…

George: “Wait, Blitzer, you know this guy? Who is he?” .-.

Blitzer almost bit his tongue. “N-no, of course not, I just-”

“You just what?”

“Well, ehrm, I’m just uh, just surprised to see you out here? Heheh…”

Wait, what is George’s reaction to seeing Lance and Blitzer and how they’re familiar with each other? I did a casual check back to some of the earlier chapters and this appears to be the first time the Blitzer ever saw him in person, just makes me feel as if he ought to have a bit more of a reaction to the winged agama that’s like three times his height than he is right now.

“Could say the same about you kids myself,” Lance spat at the ground beside him. “I’m a full grown adult. See these claws and teeth? Half the Pokemon living here won’t even dare get close to me. Meanwhile, you kids get attacked by just about everything that moves.

[ ]

So again, why did you come here? Your parents not teachin’ you right?”

Something about Lance’s last two sentences feel as if they’re meant to come after some sort of pause. It could also double as a moment for Lance to get in some sort of skeptical body language or reaction or something like that.

“N-no, we’re not, our parents, uhhh, let us…” Blitzer stammered. George shrank back out of embarrassment, trying his damndest to distract himself by scraping the ground with his foot. The less he had to explain himself to any authority figures, the better.

Lance wheezed out a laugh. “Hah! Kid, I know more about you than you realise. You’re Blitzer. That Charmander lad Nero and Nera found in the woods several years back. Oh, we all I know all about the trouble you’ve been causin’ the whole town ever since.

[ ]

Only reason they let you out is ‘cause you wouldn’t take no for an answer. Ever. Doesn’t matter what. You’d jump off a cliff if you thought it was cool.”

[ ]

“Hey! I wouldn’t do that!”

“Yes you would.”

“No I wouldn’t!!” Blitzer stomped a foot.

I mean, when he gets old enough, Blitzer can literally jump off cliffs without it being a problem, so…
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I didn’t quite peg Blitzer as being a bit of a town troublemaker, though I suppose it would explain a thing or two about how gung ho he was about dungeoneering in past chapters. That said, I feel that you missed a bit of an opportunity to show off your characters mutually reacting to one another, since Lance and Blitzer apparently aren’t as close to each other as I thought. Like it might make sense to show off more of the flustered shock or embarrassment coming from Blitzer when Lance brings up how he knows all about him.

Also, yeah. George is being really quiet through all of this right now. Like I get that this scene is written from Blitzer’s perspective, but it probably makes sense to give little reminders of “right, he’s still here” occasionally.

“Kid, do you know how many bulletins I’ve had to write because you got lost in the middle of nowhere?” asked Lance.

“No.”

Lance shrugged. “Me neither, I lost count of them.”

Lance’s line IMO works better if you emphasize it a bit harder that Blitzer has gotten lost in Mystery Dungeons a lot, since the current framing is a bit ambiguous.

George: “(In retrospect, maybe I should’ve been a bit less uncritical about going along with Blitzer out into Mystery Dungeons like these.)”
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Blitzer leaned back, his tongue pressing into his cheek. “Okay, but that’s when I was younger and weak! I’m stronger now! I can breathe fire, and I’m not afraid to use my claws, so I’ll be fine!”

Lance:
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Blitzer: “I am, okay?!”
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Lance rolled his eyes towards George. “Suuuure. And apparently you can breathe water too, since it definitely was that Oshawott kid I heard screamin’ for help just now.”

He leaned in closer. [ ]

Listen kid, my ears work fine, and I’m not a fool. You might be capable of defending yourself a little, but you’re still not much particularly strong. And neither is that Oshawott kid, for that matter. Let the grownups handle things, alright? This place is too dangerous for kids.”

[ ]

“Not for me!”

“Yes it is.”

“I can handle myself!”

“No you can’t.”

“Yes I can!”

[ ]

“Yeah, in your dreams maybe, kid. Damn Charmanders…”

IMO, it makes sense to be a bit less sparing about Lance and Blitzer’s reactions and body language to try and more firmly sell the intended vibe that Lance has and how the two relate. Like I can’t tell whether or not Lance is meant to be a gruff but ultimately well-meaning adult who’s in a very [gardexhausted] mood about Blitzer putting himself in danger yet again, or if Lance is meant to basically be that sort of pooh-pooher character that’s a step or two above being an outright bully.

As Blitzer and Lance went on a back and forth tangent, a sigh came from the quiet party in all of this. ‘I shouldn’t be quiet. This’ll go nowhere otherwise.’ “Sir?”

The bickering ceased for a moment, as George opened his mouth. “We’re not trying to cause trouble. We just wanted to help with gathering food,” he meekly said, to which the Druddigon raised a claw.

“Lad, that’s noble of you and all, but get real. You’re kids. You should be playing with your friends, not going out in the wild. Do you have any idea how dangerous the world is? Imagine how your parents would feel if you didn’t come home one day. Don’t be reckless.”

Blitzer: “Oi! We’ve been doing perfectly fine right now-!”
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George: “No, no, I think that he has a point, Blitzer. Since we did almost get our throats ripped out on multiple occasions last chapter by snarling dogs-”
Blitzer: “Hyenas.”
George: “Whatever!” >.<

It was a simple thing to say, and yet it struck like a hammer onto a nail. George’s face shriveled up. His parents. Ever since that fateful day at the doorstep of the foster’s home, they were more distant than ever. Where they were, how they were doing, it was all a blur.

Ouch.

“...what’s with that face?”

Lance had folded his arms. George attempted to bury the sinking look on his face by appearing brave. “Nothing, sir. My parents just… You’re right, I shouldn’t be reckless.”

“Who are your parents, anyway, lad?”

Well, this conversation just keeps getting more and more awkward for poor George right now.
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George swallowed. “They don’t live in the village. It’s complicated. But I’m staying with George’s parents in the meantime.” He glanced at Blitzer, and got a smirk in return.

The Druddigon grunted. “Fine by me. So yes, you’re here to gather berries. Like I said, yes there is a crisis. No, it’s not your job, not your responsibility, and not something you kids should be doing.

[ ]

But since you’re here, you might as well help.”

I kinda wonder if Lance’s line works a bit better if there’s a bit of a pause before he gets to the “I’ll take your help” part, since he just goes through all the reasons why George and Blitzer shouldn’t be here, so it might be a bit more thematically interesting to let them soak in their discouragement a bit.

“You’re saying that we can join you?” asked Blitzer with beaming eyes.

“Yes, yes, you little scamp,” Lance grumbled, fiddling with the dark green scarf wrapped around his neck. “Wouldn’t put much value in that if I were you. Only reason I’m even bothering is because you’re here already. Now, if you just follow me, we’ll get that basket filled up in no time, and then we get out of this dump.”

The detail about Lance’s scarf IMO would work better being brought up as soon as possible after his initial introduction since: A: That’s kinda hard to miss against a red-and-blue body, B: it makes the mental image of what Lance looks like crystal clear to your readers from the jump.

Blitzer pumped his fist. “Yes, yes!! We’re really going to do it! We’re really going to help people out, George!” he cheered, with a celebratory flare of his tail to boot. [ ]

“What did I tell you, kid?! No fiddling around!”

“Ah!”

[ ] George clicked his tongue. ‘Aren’t we heroes.’

A couple moments where IMO, things would work a bit better to describe the reactions / body language of Lance and George there to help set the mood a bit. Like maybe it’s just me being a more “visual” writer, but I feel like there’s room for making the picture that you’re painting here a bit clearer.

True to his word, Lance guided the children through the Azure Hills until their baskets were filled. All Blitzer and George did was follow him; directions and ferals were dealt with by the Druddigon at the front. It didn’t take long for George to get bored, Blitzer to get annoyed, and both to be disappointed.

For all their All that boasting and fantasising about heroism and strength, only to stand and watch as Lance swatted everything out of the way, without even having to put his own basket down. Not to mention the silence; no one said anything. George was certain that talking would annoy Lance even further, and thus kept to himself, picking berries and throwing them into his basket.

Lance: “Why are you complaining about this when you two by your own admission almost died on multiple occasions earlier?”
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George: “Look, that doesn’t mean that I want to get drug around just spectating you punting puppies and carrying a basket around for multiple hours!” >_>;

The good news was their baskets were full in no time at all. Lance had a nose and a knack for finding berries, it turned out. George couldn’t see or smell the berries, and Blitzer said he couldn’t, either. Lance insisted that this wasn’t his first time here, and that there was a trick to it. He also insisted that the children shut up, which they did.

I’m a little surprised that George wouldn’t be able to smell those berries since sea otters IRL have pretty good senses of smell. Maybe it’s adapted for smelling stuff in water or something like that.

At last, after having harvested enough berries, they were Lance led them out of the Mystery Dungeon. Their feet were weary, their arms were strained, and nothing sounded or felt nicer than the warmth of their beds, but they were out at last.

Blitzer: “Well. This was underwhelming.” -_-;
Lance: “Hrmph. Means that I did my job right, then.”

“Phew…” Blitzer sat down under a tree. “Can we rest here for a while? We still have to walk all the way back.”

George grimaced. ‘Uuughh… I forgot how far out we are.’

Lance rolled his eyes, his tongue hanging out of his mouth. “Not for too long. It’s already past noon, and I’d like to get back home before it’s dark. You hear?”

- Blitzer glances over at Lance -
Blitzer: “... I mean, you are quite a bit bigger than us. I don’t suppose that we could hitch a ride on your-?”
Lance:
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“You two have legs. Use them.”

“Sure,” Blitzer said. “How long do we have?”

“Five to ten minutes.”

[ ]

“What?”

“You heard me, five to ten minutes.”

[ ]

“But I’m tired!”

“And that’s why you shouldn’t play hero, laddie.” Lance shook his head. “Always the Chars.”

A couple spots where a bit of character reaction or internal thought processes would potentially go a long way, since some of these reactions feel like they’d be fun / funny to see drawn out, but they don’t really come through in the narration.

“h-Hey! What do you mean, always the Chars?! What does me being a Charmander have to do with anything?” Blitzer was flabbergasted, his eyes going back and forth between his cream coloured belly, which he now shielded with his arms, and Lance standing in front of him. The Druddigon grinned, letting his oddly shaped wings flutter in the wind.

“Kid, pay attention, ‘cause I’ll say it once. I’m a well travelled man. Went all over Eravate in my youth, and got to meet many different Pokemon in those days. Let me tell you, Chars have a penchant for startin’ all sorts of trouble. Always stubborn, always making themselves out to be tough, always spoilin’ for a fight, always wanting to be big damn heroes. ‘Tis in your kin’s blood to be that way, I swear.”

I mean, based off what I know about where this story winds up going later on… yeah, Blitzer isn’t going to be an exception to that rule. Though ‘Eravate’ is the name of the kingdom / landmass that we’re on right now, huh? Duly noted.

George struggled to hold in a snicker. ‘That explains a lot, actually.’

“But we’re not all like that,” Blitzer said. He didn’t sound convinced himself. “And why is wanting to be heroic a bad thing?”

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Oh, so Blitzer has met other Chars before that fit exactly this archetype that Lance brought up, huh?

“‘Cause most of the people who want to be heroes end up in trouble. Stubbornly charging into things headfirst with brute force never ends so well. Kind of like you and your little trip out here. Just because you can fight off some bugs doesn’t mean you’re ready to go toe to toe with other creatures, kid,” Lance said.

Lance… has seen multiple Chars crash and burn at their attempts to play hero, huh? Since given that Eravate is very strongly implied to be ruled by a repressive government at the moment…
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Blitzer let out a soft groan, and resorted to playing with his fingers. George waddled over to a tree, not letting the Charmander out of his sight for a moment. A soft breeze brushed up against his fur, carrying a grassy scent. As it teemed in his nostrils, George looked down; his scalchop had found its way into his hands.

‘This isn’t funny. I shouldn’t be laughing. Why did I find it funny in the first place? That’s not fair to Blitzer... I’m supposed to be on his side.’

Probably because Blitzer was having some lulzy flustered reactions, even if they weren’t really described much in the narration.

Lance kneeled down in front of Blitzer and placed a claw on his shoulder.

Again, lad, I’m not saying you’re bad for wanting to make a difference. Especially now that there’s a food shortage. But look. I’ve seen many people end up gettin’ far more than they bargained for, all ‘cause of their hero fantasies,” he said “That’s bad enough in better times. But now, with the Soldiers around? You have to be even more careful. They can do whatever they want, as long as the Queen’s got no problem with it. And she’s no friend of ours. We wouldn’t be here if she was.”

Which while really sensible and rational advice… is never how stories like these work, so yeah, I’m sure that all of this is going straight out the window within the span of like a chapter at most.

“...Yeah,” whispered Blitzer.

“Exactly. Don’t take any of this too harshly, kid. We live in difficult times, and we’ll have to live with be realistic about ‘em. I sure would love things to be better, but I’m afraid that’s not going to happen.” Lance’s head pitched up at the skies, his eyes gleaming with a longing spectre.

Oh, so Lance basically fill the same narrative role as that one Water Nation elder from the first couple episodes of ATLA that tries to talk Katara and Sokka out from getting involved with Aang. Duly noted, if a bit [sadwott] to see how much Lance has basically given up on things ever getting better beyond just going full ‘grey man’ on the troubles in the world around them.

“But, if no one does anything, who will?” Blitzer stammered.

Lance cut Blitzer off. “Oh, there’s some people that are doing things. But you know what? It’s unlikely their efforts will bear fruit. Trust me, you don’t wanna know. You really do not,” he said with a dire glint in his eye. “Trust me, you don’t wanna know. You really do not.”

“...Okay,” Blitzer said, trying to shuffle away.

“...is everything really that bad?” George pondered out loud. Lance turned his head. “I mean, they took our food-”

Lance: “With complete impunity. And we’re just a random village here in this land. Do you really think other places are doing better right now?”
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“That’s only the beginning, lad. Calm before the storm, mark my words. Those Soldiers will be back for more. I fear appeasement will only get us so far. But we have no choice. Whatever they’re planning, we can’t resist much.

George leaned back against the tree, gulping. Lance spoke in a dull, serious tone. It sounded as if all his emotions had been sucked out of him. No, his eyes told another story. One filled with agony and suffering, fire, and worse.

Lance… didn’t always live in Greenfield, did he? Since he sure seems to know a lot about what these Soldiers have done and are capable of for him to be this hopeless and jaded.

“Can we not talk about this any longer? ” Blitzer asked. He too looked sad. The Druddigon gave a nod in his direction.

“Yes, as a matter of fact, we’ve wasted enough time around these parts. Let’s go back, shall we? Sooner we hit the road, the sooner we’ve got this done and over with.”

George: “I… didn’t realize that there was so much stuff going on in the background in Greenfield.” .-.
Blitzer: “I mean, in your defense, you literally came with zero memories, so… yeah. Don’t beat yourself up too hard about it.”

And with that, Lance turned tail and made his way back. While Blitzer got up to follow, George carefully raised his back against the tree, one hand on his basket, worrying.

‘Why does no one want to talk? What are these soldiers even doing that no one wants to say anything about them?’ “Maybe I’d understand you better, right?” he said out loud.

I mean, from the undertones that Lance was giving off, it sounds like they’re going about in search of fresh conquests.

“Oi, Oshawott kid, get over here! I’m not waiting for you to get those legs up!”

“Aaah!”

Swift on his feet, George sprinted back towards Blitzer’s side, with whom he followed Lance back to the bridge, once again not saying much on the way. At the bridge, however, two strange Pokemon with green scarves wrapped around their necks leaned against the guard rail, watching the stream flow into the horizon. A slight grumble from Lance and a meek ‘hi’ from Blitzer failed to get any response out of them. George stared at the back of Blitzer’s head as they passed, and didn’t look back.

‘They’re a creepy bunch. Know ‘em when I see ‘em…’

Wait, green scarves? Like Lance’s, or…? .-.

It wasn’t until after they had passed that George’s ears caught wind of them talking.

“So, Sergeant Machoke. The criminals should be close by.”

“Yeah, and there’s no tracks anywhere. Great.”

Ah yes, the soldiers have come into play. I had a feeling they’d pop up from how much Lance stopped to talk about them, but here I was thinking that they’d actually make it back to Greenfield first.
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… Though wait, did it really make sense for Lance to shout at George to hurry up instead of just going over and dragging him along to hide? Since you’d think that he’d want to avoid making any unnecessary sound while these Soldiers are so close by.

“Damn criminals. Must’ve ran off in the water. Or hiding out in Azure Hills. One of the two.”

“Yeah, that’s not stopping you though, is it, Sergeant Crawdaunt. We’re catching those sons of vermin.”

Wait, “sons of vermin”? Like I get that it’s the obvious stand-in for “SOBs” given the intended vibes of this story, but unless ‘vermin’ is a specific slur in this setting, I wonder if it’d have worked better as just “vermin” there.

“Hey, hurry up, you!” Lance growled.

“Huh?”

George’s attention had been so focused on the two strangers that he had failed to notice Blitzer having walked ahead, and not just a little bit either. He hurried his way back to Blitzer’s side, bit his lip, then poked the Charmander on the shoulder.

“Those two Pokemon, who are they? They don’t look like ordinary folk.” ‘They look like criminals, alright.’

Blitzer: “George, since when do criminals go around calling themselves ‘Sergeant’?” >_>;
George: “... I dunno? I have amnesia, remember?” ^^;

Blitzer winced out loud. “Hng, yeah, you’re right. Those were Soldiers.”

George almost jumped out of surprise. “How do you know?”

“Did you see what they were wearing?”

George: “Green scarves like Lance’s?” ^^;
Lance: “Yeeeeeeah, I suppose the text should’ve been a bit clearer as to if we had any differences in patterns or the like.”
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“No? To be honest, I didn’t want to look at them. They just had this… aura around them, or something.”

Blitzer nodded. “That’s for the better. I’ll tell you more about it later. Can you pretend you didn’t see anything until we get back home? Trust me, that’ll make the trip back a little easier.”

George frowned. “If you say so…”

“I mean it, George.”

George: “Wait, but what’s it matter if there’s nobody to overhear-?”
Blitzer: “Just… do it, okay?” >_>;

“Yes, yes I understand.”

“Alright then. You’ll feel better soon. It’s about time we got back home, anyway. I’m starving!” Blitzer rubbed his stomach. George felt a growl come out of his own stomach, and forced a smile to his face.

“Yeah, me too.”

I’m honestly surprised that Lance didn’t have anything to say about what was going on here. Like I get that he’s a bitter, jaded pill, but it still feels like he’d at least say something to the effect of “don’t dawdle and keep quiet, we should get moving before they notice we passed through” or something like that.

And so, they walked back home, spending the time spotting wild Pokemon and having Blitzer tell stories about his experiences with said Pokemon. It was a fun little distraction from all the worries about the Soldiers, which George appreciated. Of course, the longing for information persisted, but it would come in due time. For now, it was time to go back home and get some well deserved rest.

Yeah, enjoy it while it lasts, pal. Since I know how stories like these work well enough to tell that you’re going to have Soldier problems pretty soon.

[ ]

“Ya think that’s ‘im?”

“No doubt about it. The energy coming off that little Oshawott is unmistakable. Whether he’s ready, though…”

“...’s another matter, ya mean to say.”

Wait, where is this set right now anyways? Like I get if you don’t want to reveal the speakers just yet, but even a little cue like “clearing overlooking Greenfield / Nero+Nera’s house” would go a long way to establishing just how close at hand danger is to Blitzer and George.
“Yes, Skal. Let me finish before you yammer over me.”

“Blegh. Don’t need any psychic powers t’know what I’m lookin’ at. Feels like this whole mission was a waste of time. Ya think Artanouk’ll accept him?”

[ ]
“Give it time. He’ll get there. He has to.”

“We ain’t got forever, Terez.”

Oh, so these two and their employers need George for… reasons. Reasons that are probably not good for George or just about anyone in Eravate, really.

“Yes, I’m more than aware of that. But don’t worry. One day he’ll be ready… Whether he believes that himself or whether he will be forced is none of my concern. That child has a great role to play. You know this. That’s why we’re keeping an eye on him. And I’m not about to turn my back.”

[ ]
“Sure hope you ain’t jokin’.”

“I’m not a jokester. Especially not about these things.”

“Have it your way then.”

Ominous conversation in the shadows is ominous. Though I do wonder if there was more room to hint at who these two were than what was provided by the story.

Chapter 9

As the sun sank towards the horizon, the two boys came back home, a full basket in their hands and their lips stained purple. Lance put his basket down, stretched his limbs, then turned towards the children with a grimace frown on his face.

“Alright kids, here you are. Did you learn your lesson?”

‘Grimace’ is more of a face that one would have when hurt or having feelings of dread/unpleasantness. It probably makes more sense for Lance to just frown here.

Blitzer and George nodded. “Yes. Don’t go out exploring when you’re too young,” Blitzer said. George puffed his cheeks out like a hamster while listening.

‘Well, at least we can repeat the lesson to ourselves.’

“Good. Off with you.”

Bold of you to assume that you’re just going to be allowed to stick to Lance’s advice and not be forced onto the run in like a chapter, you two.

With a lash of his tail, the Druddigon returned to his house at the edge of town. Blitzer and George sped off towards the village square, the former grinning intensely.

“Haha! He totally bought it!” Blitzer said. George's eyes opened wide; Blitzer’s cheers had attracted the attention of every pair of eyeballs in ear range. Without further ado, he threw his hand in front of the Charmander’s mouth and nodded awkwardly at all the dumbfounded stares coming their way.

George: “Blitzer, seriously?!” >.<

‘’Maybe don’t celebrate too loud, Blitzer.”

“Oops… hihi.”

inb4 Lance also overheard things and just facepalmed and didn’t bother coming back out to yell at Blitzer.

With George having quieted the mood, the two made their way home. A few knocks on the door later, Nera answered.

“Blitzer! George! You’re back!”

“Yes! And we’ve got the berries!” Blitzer said with a smile.

Nera wrapped her forelegs around Blitzer, who returned the gesture. “I’ve been worried sick! You were gone for so long, I was starting to imagine awful things. Oh, I shouldn’t have. I really shouldn’t.”

No, you really, really should have given that had Lance not been there, these two would’ve had like a 99% chance of either getting mauled to death by ferals in Azure Hills or else summarily arrested by those two Soldiers on their way out.
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“Nope! I’m still here! It’s like I’ve told you, mom. No one bests me so easily!”

“...What about me?” George looked on unamused, tapping a foot. “Don’t just leave me standing…”

The Nidorina pulled him into the hug, getting a yelp out of George in the process. “Of course! You two must be hungry after an entire day out there. Come on in, it’s about time I got to work on dinner…”

Nera suddenly sniffed a lungful [ ].

...Wait, is that… Persim on your mouth? Why does your mouth reek of Persim, Blitzer?”

IMO, Nera’s smelling bit should be its own paragraph and expanded a bit. Though Persim Berries apparently stink in this story. Duly noted.

“Oh, well....” Blitzer sheepishly scratched the back of his head. “I did get a little hungry on the way back, so uhm… I snacked a little. And George did, too.”

George shook his head. “I only had one. You had like four, Blitzer.”

Nera chuckled. “Why now, you both must be famished! And why wouldn’t you be? You’re both hard workers, and hard workers deserve a good reward! So come on in.”

Wait, but is Blitzer even going to be able to eat dinner after going through four Persim Berries? Since based on canonical dimensions, they’d be roughly equivalent to a larger hand fruit for a Charmander. ^^;

Once inside, they were greeted by the sight of Nero laying slumped out over the table, his head resting on top of his forelegs. It looked as if he had passed out from a drunken stupor.

“Please tell me you didn’t get hurt back there.”

“Of course we didn’t, dad! We’re better than that!” Blitzer said. Nero peeked up from his forelegs, carefully studying the two.

Can’t tell if Nero is legit hung over right now or else if he’s just been really tired from the day’s events.

“Hm. No scratches, aside from a few spots… Wait, what? You’re not all scratched up?” Nero’s head shot up. “Well now, colour me surprised! You managed to get out there and come back without any injuries!” he said, his voice far more energetic and jovial.

“Yeah, we did really well today!” Blitzer ran up to his father as if he had a report card to show. “We’ve got a whole basket full of berries, and we got a whole bunch stronger, too! George even learned how to breathe water!

Right. That’s a thing for Water-types in general in this story. I forgot about that.

Nero grinned. “I’m glad to hear life’s been treating you and your friend well. I sure hope it stays that way.”

“Indeed it will!” Blitzer said with a cheer.

George raised his hands in a mocked cheer with a fake smile. Of course, if it hadn’t been for Lance, their time in the Azure Hills wouldn’t have such a happy ending. But it was best not to tell Nero that. George liked getting to leave the hovel unsupervised, let alone how Blitzer felt about it.

Oh, so George did realize how close of a call they had in Azure Hills. I… kinda wonder if that should’ve been a bit more of his thought process earlier on, since I kinda got the impression that he basically just shrugged things off after they got past those two Soldiers.

After dinner, Blitzer and George went into their room, leaving Blitzer’s parents alone for the night. The Charmander yawned upon arrival, having and struggled to keep his tail off the ground. George crashed on his bed, his body begging for some rest. He still wanted answers to what on earth was going on with the Soldier questions, and the silent meeting on the bridge had raised far more questions about them.

“Aah, I’m tired, and yet I’m still not spent! Maybe I’ll stay up a little longer,” said Blitzer, stretching his arms.

[ ]
“Yeah, that’s fine by me,” George said, curling up on the straws. They felt a little more comfortable than in the morning. Either he was getting used to straw beds, or he was just that tired. He couldn’t tell.

I kinda wonder if George is missing some sort of “climbdown” from mentally being in “wait, what about the Soldiers?” mode to cute chatter and stuff with Blitzer.

“Don’t go to sleep right away, I need to show you something!” Blitzer held up a toy in front of George. It was some sort of paper spinner, each arm wrinkled and stained with dirt. “Watch!”

He breathed on the toy, careful to make sure no flames got out. The toy spun like a fan, each arm producing whirlwind-esque sounds as they rotated around the centre. It was a hypnotising thing, simple yet clever. The sort of amusement where if one looked for too long, and one might just get dizzy. Blitzer blew on it a few times more, giggling all the while.

“Oh, that’s nice,” George muttered. Such a simple toy, yet Blitzer could get so much joy out of it. George’s thoughts wandered off to his own toys, back at the foster’s home. By now, either they had all gone into the garbage, or some other kid was playing with them to relieve some stress. Not that he had touched them in years.

Yeeeeeeah, George is never willfully going back to his old world after getting isekaied into this one, I can already tell.

‘If only I could have been so happy… that would have been very nice, wouldn’t it. Maybe I wouldn’t have to feel bad, being a ‘juvenile loser who plays with toys’... isn’t that right, headmistress? Wesley? Maybe I wouldn’t even be here...’

So Wesley was one of George’s bullies on the other side, duly noted.

“Hey, what’s the matter?” Blitzer had noticed George sulking to himself and put the toy down.

“Me? Oh, it’s nothing,” George replied, his tail curled around his body. [ ]

“Are you sure? You don’t look so well.”

George gulped. “I’m just tired, that’s all. It’s been a long day.”

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Not that it hasn’t been a long day, but yeah, there’s very obviously more weighing on you right now, George.

“Well yeah, it’s been exhausting, but you don’t look very exhausted. More like you’ve seen a ghost,” Blitzer said, pointing a finger at the ceiling. George sighed, and steeled his nerves.

‘Shift the conversation.’

The Oshawott sighed. “Okay, that wasn’t honest. My mind’s… still on the Soldiers from back at the bridge. You knew right away who they were, just like that.” George imitated the snap of a finger. "Didn’t second guess yourself either.”

I mean, that still isn’t honest from you, George. But I suppose that you were wondering about them a little earlier.

Blitzer sat down on his bed, careful to not drop his toy or to let the flame on his tail touch the straws. George reflexively reached for his scalchop; there was no turning back now.

“Recognizing Soldiers isn’t hard,” the Charmander explained. “They’re all wearing something green. A wristband, a scarf, anything else… You see it, and you’ll know. Did you see what those Pokemon on the bridge wore?”

- Beat moment -
George: “Wait, but wasn’t Lance very specifically described as wearing a ‘green scarf’ when we ran into him?”
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Blitzer: “... Maybe it’s a different shade of green, since it was a ‘dark green scarf’? I mean, if Lance was a Soldier he wouldn’t have helped us sneak around those two on the bridge, right…?”

George pictured himself back on the bridge. Below his feet raged the waters, and the sun shone with volcanic intensity. Overwhelming as it was, he forced himself to concentrate on the two Pokemon. ‘Machoke and a Crawdaunt… hang on. Wait a minute. The Machoke had a scarf on… And the Crawdaunt had… some kind of ribbon or band?’

With a thump of his tail, George dropped his scalchop. “I think I remember. The Machoke had a helmet, and the Crawdaunt had something around his tail. Right?”

Blitzed clicked his tongue. “Well, both had scarves around their necks, but close enough.”

Those details were not described at all in the last chapter, just saying. Like if the idea was that these effects were hard to make out, it would still make sense to at least describe the shapes of these different articles of clothing or something like that.

“Oh…” George took his scalchop back into his hands. Blitzer shrugged.

“Close enough. But yes, that’s what Soldiers were. That’s how you recognize one.”

George held onto a frown. The questions had only begun. “Why the green scarves?”

So, is it going to be George or Blitzer that has the
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moment of realization about Lance first? ^^;

Blitzer shrugged again, then blew on his spinner. George’s eyes dashed back and forth over the room; the shadow of the spinner flickered.

“No one really knows. Kind of like this spinner, I don’t know why it spins, but it does.”

“Okay…” George slumped back against the wall. “Do you know how many of them there are?”

Blitzer looked away and shivered. George felt his own body shake as well; as if thousands of spiders had fallen into the room. An audible gulp from Blitzer made him clutch onto his shell with the intensity of a nail.

George: “... This is one of those questions where I’m going to really, really regret asking about it, huh?”
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“Well, um…” Blitzer sounded as if he was being choked. “I’ve only ever seen about ten at the same time,” he muttered, “but there’s supposed to be thousands… no, tens of thousands. Each stronger than the whole village combined. And that’s why everyone is afraid of them. Make one upset, you’ll get the rest.”

Do villages that piss off these Soldiers badly enough even still exist afterwards?
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George breathed in deep. ‘But the ones on the bridge didn’t look that strong.’

I like how George is saying this when both of those Soldiers were literally double his standing height. >:V

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“Can I ask you a question, George? Why do you want to know this?” Blitzer asked.

George backed up against the wall, as if cornered by Blitzer. “Because nobody has been telling me anything. All I know about the soldiers is that they’re bad and that they serve some queen.”

Blitzer sighed. “But George, I don’t know much about them either. No one in the village tells me anything either.”

That actually makes me wonder just how nasty those Soldiers are going to turn out to be. Like on the one hand, this is a K+ rated fic on FFN, on the other hand, with the way that everyone is trying to hide stories about the Soldiers from the local younguns, it makes me think that they’ve got things about them that would be fuel for:

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George raised an eye. “Wait, why?”

Blitzer shook his head. “They say that I’m too young to know more, and that’s all they tell me. No matter how much I ask, nothing. Or they just tell me to go away.”

Yeah, I can already tell that when we do get to find out more about those Soldiers later on in the story, that it’s going to be unsettling for these two.

“But even you have to know something more than just this, right? You’ve lived here for almost all your life.”

“You know, we haven’t actually had many run-ins with Soldiers here in town, ever. Yesterday was the first time in a year at least. Although, I think we’ll be seeing more of them now….”

So historically, they basically just show up for tribute payments and then buzz off. I wonder if they at least do a good job at dealing with Outlaws or if they just “Lol. Lmao” over that.

George sat and listened, his breaths sounding evermore fatigued with each exhale. Blitzer’s voice betrayed a greater worry. There had to have been more he wasn’t letting on. With how late it was, and George being glad to be on Blitzer’s good side, he had to let it slide. For now, at least. So many questions remained unanswered.

Or, he could just genuinely be ignorant given how getting any information about the Soldiers from the adults in this town is like trying to squeeze blood from a stone.

Blitzer went on to throw his mouth wide open in a yawn. “So, do you have any idea what we could do tomorrow? Because I can’t think of anything, really.”

George shrugged. “Go exploring again?”

Imagine thinking this is a good idea after spotting Soldiers roaming around the boonies of your town.
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[ ]

“Eh, maybe. But where?”

“Greenfield Forest?”

“But we’ve already been there.”

“Well, we both want to get stronger, right?” George flexed a frail arm for emphasis. “We could train there tomorrow.”

Blitzer: “Is it really exploring if we’re just seeing the same place again and again?”
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George: “Hey! Getting tougher’s a part of exploring, too! Don’t knock it!”

The Charmander shook his head. “Nuh uh. That sounds boring to me. I want to explore something new,” he said. George stared at him, unamused.

‘I thought you were the one that wanted to get stronger so badly.’

Blitzer: “I can want both things, you know.” >_>;

“Okay. Well, if not that, can we go back to what we were going to do a day ago, and meet the other kids in the village? I’d like to meet them.”

Blitzer nodded. “Sure, if that’s what you want to do, then I’m all for it. Even if the kids might not like me.”

Oooh boy, there’s a story behind this one, I can already tell. Though if the other kids genuinely don’t like Blitzer all that much, I wonder if he should’ve shown a bit more initial hesitance before agreeing.

George bit his lip. “What do you mean, don’t like you? Why would the other kids not like you? You seem perfectly fine to me.”

Blitzer clicked his tongue. “Well, erhm… I was playing with them once, and uh, I didn’t really look where my tail was going, and, well, uh… it didn’t end so good,” he said, covering his face with his hands to hide a few awkward chuckles.

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Though that actually makes me wonder if Nero and Nera deliberately fireproofed their house a bit or if Blitzer has to get periodic reminders to mind his tail to avoid setting stuff on fire.

George slapped his forehead. ‘You know, for being born with it, he sure forgets about it easily.’ ”Great. Well, do you think they’ll accept you now, or is that not going to happen?”

Blitzer gave a quick shrug in reply. “We’ll see. It’s sure worth a try.”

Oh, well that certainly sounds positive. Not.

George’s head leaned further and further to one side, even with him propping it up by one arm. Time didn’t slow down for anyone. Ready or not, you it was best to be prepared for anything, preferably as fast as possible. Especially basic sleep.

Okay then. But say that it goes completely wrong tomorrow, do you have any other suggestions? Anything else that we can do in this town?”

Blitzer curled up on his straw bed. “I don’t know. The café, maybe.”

Wait, y’all have a café in town? With what customer base? Since at first I thought that Greenfield was basically four houses and a crossroads.
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“There’s a café in the village?”

“Yeah. Didn’t you see that big building in the main square?”

Wait, was… this described at all in earlier chapters? Like I remember there being a square brought up in earlier chapters, but I don’t recall there being mention of there being a particularly large building in it.

George thought back to earlier in the afternoon, all while sliding onto his side until his head rested on the straw underneath. Nothing in particular came to mind, however. The town’s board, some houses flanking the square’s perimeter, and some Pokemon gathered around. Besides that, just an empty slate. He shrugged.

“Not really. All I remember are houses and other people.”

Huh. Maybe the sparse description in some chapters is deliberate. Since if George didn’t ever notice this café until Blitzer brought it up, I suppose that it would also be logically be absent in scenes narrated by him.

You didn’t see that big building? Or the crowd around the entrance?”

George rolled onto his back. “The crowd, maybe. I didn’t notice any café, though. You were louder than everyone there put together.”

The bit in underline reads a bit redundant to Blitzer’s earlier “big building” question. It might make sense to focus on some specific part of the building that would stand out, e.x.:

“Really? Not even its rooftop? Or the crowd around the entrance?”

Some food for thought, anyways.

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“Oh well.” Blitzer followed George’s lead by rolling over. “Anyway, that’s the café. There’s a bunch of Pokemon gathered there. But I doubt they would let us in. Only adults are allowed in there. Believe me, I tried.”

That… sounds like it’s a bit more than just a ‘café’ there, Blitzer. ^^;

George’s eyes were drawn to the wall. “Then that’s not going to happen.”

“Probably not, no.”

[ ]

“Alright, so who do you think we should meet first?”

I think that it probably makes sense to explicitly reroute George’s train of thought to “whelp, back to the village kids, I guess”, especially if he still finds some part of it awkward.

“I was thinking of Jinni. I still haven’t apologised for last time. Or Corst. Or Junior. Or actually, maybe Alcia-”

[ ]

“Maybe we’re better off deciding that tomorrow, actually,” George said, then yawned.

“Sure. I’m too tired to think, anyway.”

This probably works a bit better to note that George is dozing off a bit and notices it before he cuts off Blitzer, since it reads a bit sudden otherwise.

Blitzer and George bid each other good night. Not too long after, George was half dreaming and half daydreaming, kept from proper sleep by the company of Blitzer’s snores. Perhaps tomorrow bore more answers. Or better company than a snoring Charmander. Which was still preferable to the headmistress' company.

Something to look forward to next time, since I smell shenanigans in the air.

Well, that was a fun pair of chapters. I honestly was expecting things to go sideways a lot faster from the moment in Chapter 8 where Blitzer and George stumble across those soldiers in the boonies, but it sounds like peaceful days in Greenfield aren’t quite over just yet. The main star of the show of these two chapters is the dramatic tension that keeps building up and priming the audience to wait for the other shoe to drop, along with the characterization that makes the different members of the cast stand out. Especially Lance, who is a nice thematic contrast to everyone we’ve seen so far, and probably needs his share of hugs… carefully, in case he has Rough Skin.

As for criticisms, my number one bone that I have to pick is that I think that there are some parts that are a bit too cut-down. Like I get that having short and digestible chapters is a meta goal for you and that some of the omissions in description are very different like with the whole café that George is revealed to have overlooked, but there were still other parts where I felt like I either was having trouble getting into things or getting a read on what was happening from a lack of little accenting details. Also, there were a few moments because of it where “wait, where did that come from?” came in play like the mention of the articles of clothing the two Soldiers on the bridge were wearing… which comes up a full chapter after encountering them. There were also a couple parts where the wording seemed clunky to me, but those are mostly minor fixes. I also thought that Lance’s actions for trying to help Blitzer and George sneak past the Soldiers didn’t quite add up since they didn’t feel as ‘sneaky’ as one would expect for a ‘mon trying to get past others that they desperately need to not have discover them.

But all-in-all, I had fun with these two @Gyeig , and they’re definitely more put-together than what I remembered from my experience with the v1 of Chapters 1-6 being. Hope the feedback helped, and I think I’m beginning to see how it is that you’ve built a bit of a following of this story, even if I’m pretty sure that the really good stuff is still a ways down the pipe.

Kudos, and best of luck with the rest of Review Blitz.
 

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Hi Gyeig! Figured I'd return the favor from your review, so here I am! I'll be covering chapters 4-6 today.

Chapter 4:
The fact that blankets are considered a luxury genuinely doesn't surprise me, and to me kind of sets in stone the technological level of this fic. The fact that they're expensive makes me think that they're all hand-made, meaning there is no method for mass-productuon. Plus you get into things like having to make specialized items for some pokemon with unusual body types or that couldn't normally use one (like a pokemon with an open flame-for example) and that drives the cost of production up a lot. It does kind of make me wonder what kind of skills are expected out of most pokemon families though.

Haha, looks like the boys have just immediately run off into danger. Not too surprised. They are children, and I get the feeling they don't really comprehend the level of danger they could be getting into. I wonder how long it'll take for them to get a rude awakening.

And then we have our first dungeon sequence. It’s maybe a little stereotypical, but I think it works out, because it serves a purpose. It gives George a chance to learn the very basics of what he can do in a relatively safe environment. Although not gonna lie, I half-expected it to turn out that he’d gotten poisoned from his encounter with the spinarak. Which could have been interesting, but honestly wasn’t necessary. Especially this early on when it’s clear that this fic means to ease our leads into things before things get wild.

Overall a good chapter! (also, cute art at the end is a win!)

Chapter 5:
And it certainly didn’t take long for things to go sour, did it? I kind of hope we get a closer look at these soldiers soon, and how much they might outclass the typical pokemon. As depending on how strong they are, I could see pockets of resistance due to their mistreatment of the commoner. Resistances that would admittedly probably end up crushed once the might of the whole army came down on them.

Ferals with a black glow. Oh, now this is intriguing. I wonder how long it’ll take for these guys to show up properly in the story and cause our heroes some serious problems…

Not fast, but I’m starting to figure out how being a Pokemon… works.” He swallows
Tense change typo here, by the way.
I am a little surprised at how willing Nera is to - to a degree - side with the kids. I think she does have some point in the sense that so far, they’re showing themselves as capable of handling themselves. But I do find myself wondering if her willingness is a cultural thing, where kids are expected to run around and get stronger (albiet probably in a more controlled environment than what Blitzer has been doing) or if this is just kind her way of parenting. Curious to see if we’ll see more of that later.


Chapter 6:
Blitzer can smell George’s fear? Oooh, you have my attention. I really like it when pokemon fics - especially pmd ones - play into the more animalistic side of pokemon, in that they have animalistic behaviors or traits that separate them from human. Like this here. It helps them feel like pokemon, rather than animals in a human skin. I think you’ve done a good job of that so far. I’ve noticed a lot of little body language things already, but this one in particular is what made me want to bring it up.

Okay, aside from that, I want to speculate on George’s nightmare a bit. It seems to me like the implication is that it felt very real. Which makes me wonder what the nature of his arrival is. Is the headmistress somehow here? Or is some other antagonistic force manifesting as her to hinder George? Or maybe it really is a dream after all. Consider me curious.

Ah, interesting. It sounds like clothes or cloths aren’t usually worn around town, where everyone knows everyone. But when a pokemon is traveling further away or might be in an area where they could be mistaken for feral, they wear some identifiable object (the scarves in this case.) Interesting worldbuilding!

Dang, they ruined the fields? Maybe it’s a bit of an exaggeration, but it really says something about how they view pokemon they deem lesser.

Oooh, more Blizter backstory. Not much to comment on it, but always love to see more in a way that advances something like this (in this case, by making a conncetion between their pasts.)

Overall thoughts:
I think this is a pretty good set of chapters. By the end of chapter 5 we’ve reached an inciting incident to get the boys traveling outside of the village. I’m curious to see where it ends up, and if it’s going to be a long time before they’re able to go back home, or if this will be a relatively self-contained arc before things really kick off. Until next time!
 

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Review catchup!

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Thanks again for the review, glad to hear the re-editing efforts I did in December did pay off, even if there's still some artefacts leftover from it. The scarves coming up a chapter after the encounter on the bridge was a thing that I wrote during said re-edit. Should be an easy fix... eventually, because I'm not about to do another re-editing wave on these first 15 chapters lol. I'd be busy for a looong time if I kept re-editing.

That said, can't say I agree with a lot of your suggestions involving Lance. He's not particularly enthusiastic about essentially having to babysit George and Blitzer, hence why he isn't being conspicuous when getting them across the bridge.

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Thanks for the review!

Funnily enough, you've pointed out quite a few things that... well, once you're deeper into the story, you can see used in some capacity :)

Think one of my main regrets is not highlighting that feral - nonferal distinction more. Not to say this is everything I'm doing with it, but I think I could've spent a bit more time showcasing that the nonferal Pokemon in this world are kind of a hybrid: There's still clear animal body language, and they don't wear many clothes for the reasons you mentioned (just scarves and the like), but they still make the effort to show themselves as civilised on the road. Maybe I could do a short companion story about it in the future.
 
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Chapter 29 - An Awful Plan​


Rain fell upon Agate Township, accompanied by the hollow howling of a northwestern wind. It wasn’t rare that the wind would flow straight from the Dragonspine Mountain in the centre of the continent, but it wasn’t ever a pretty sight, today more so than ever. The Post Tower was closed, as no mail bird wanted to put their life on the line for speedy deliveries. The streets were awash with muddy water, and citizen and Soldier alike huddled indoors.



From the top of the Crest’s headquarters in the city, a wooden structure bound together by vines, Gareda reeled her head back from the window. “What a waste,” she grumbled to herself, pacing back and forth. “No wonder this city’s one big crapsack. Blegh. Where’s duck face and bird brain when you need them.”



It had been a few days since she had dispatched Vli and Luffy to Greenfield village, all on a hitch that a little otter and his clumsy lizard friend would yield clues to greater things. Her sensory hitches generally weren’t wrong.



And indeed, Vli reported that they were accompanied by an Alliance member before they had gotten back home. Then, a day or two after that, they came back with a bombshell. Those two had the flute piece.



That was all she needed to know. It was time to take things a step further. She had ordered Luffy and Vli back to Agate Township to discuss. It was taking them long to get here, though. Too long. She scowled out of the window.



‘I swear to Arceus, I’ll rip the head off whichever joker is messing around with the weather today. Of all the days… it just had to be, hadn’t it?’



Her wait would continue for another hour before knocking came from the tall wooden door behind her. Before she could answer, it flung open, and a familiar red and yellow face entered the room, holding up an arm on which another familiar face sat.



“Sorry for the holdup!”



Gareda turned her scowl at the guests. “Was it so difficult to ask if you could come in beforehand?”



Luffy wiped her mouth off with her free arm. Water was dripping onto the floor from said arm. “Sorry about that. Weather’s not being particularly cooperative today,” she said with an uneasy smile on her face.



Gareda blew air through her nose. “Fair enough. Growing up on the Dragonspine meant dealing with this kind of weather all the time. I take it the islands and the hills got off lucky by comparison.”



Vli shook his large orange bill back and forth, hopping off Luffy’s arm after having made enough of a scene. “Nah. The Azzuros get plenty of rain, but it’s never this darn cold. I’m curious how you continental folk manage to deal with that,” he said, spreading his wings to shake the excess water off.



Gareda scoffed at the Toucannon. “We’re not built like pampered islanders, that’s why.”



“Hey,” Vli said, talons gripping into the floor. For a moment it appeared as if he wanted to say something, then backed off at the last second. His eyes were drawn to the extra teeth Gareda had bared.



Luffy wandered away from the door, arms stretched in a manner Gareda found far too revealing. Close to showing off, but not quite. Then again, her arms had a nice shape to them. Not too thick, not too thin. What a shame they were attached to Luffy. “Eh,” she said. “Back home, the rain didn’t come often, but when it did, boy did it ever come. Everyone always scurried for shelter. Miserable stuff.”



‘I’d run too if a minute of rainwater can make me sick.’ “Right. Let’s not waste our time here,” Gareda said, raising her arms to a handful of small mats positioned around a table. They were thin, and wouldn’t shield from the hard floorboards well, but there wasn’t much better out here. Agate Township wasn’t Luminity City. Most of the locals weren’t the kind of Pokemon to do their business around a table.



Luffy and Vli took their mats bearing faces that tried too hard to seem normal. Gareda’s sensors didn’t fall for it, not even a little. The scowl which had faded when the two first walked in made a comeback.



‘We haven’t even begun yet, and we’re already knee deep in Boufallant crap. Wonderful.’



Gareda took place on the mat on the other side of the table with a sway of her large tail, and cleared her throat. “So then. Let’s hear it. What have you two seen these past few days?”



Vli poked his beak up into the air. “Definitive proof, my lady.”



Gareda tilted her head backwards, letting the star on her forehead rise like the stars in the night sky. “Proof of what?” she asked, as a wind swept past the window. ‘ He should remember.’



Someone outside yeled over the sound of the wind. A parent, by the sound of it. No one in the meeting made mention of it. “Proof that those two kids have been aiding the Alliance,” Vli spoke with a serious gaze. “And it’s not just them who’ve been getting their hands dirty. The whole village is practically infested with collaborators and Alliance members.”



The pupils in Gareda’s eyes widened. Like lightning, she slammed her talons against the wooden table. “...Say that again?” she asked, her voice stern and clear. That the Oshawott and his friend had unknowingly been running errands for the Alliance, she knew. But the rot running down to the roots was unexplored territory. She imagined herself back in front of the crowd that had greeted her in the village that day. She felt their stares. The exact temperature of the sun on her scales. The wind. Her sensors panicking. Those two.



Neither of the other two at the table had given a response that wasn’t giving Gareda an awkward stare. “You… Do you mean to say the Alliance…” she muttered, then fell silent. Finishing the sentence was a bridge too far. Her thoughts were jumbled and scrambled, crushed and scattered to the winds, and she was left salvaging what she could. An image appeared in her head. Patrina. The queen’s teeth shining as her vines lashed out towards her body… and towards them.



“...Yes, that is what we’re saying.” Luffy drummed her claws on the table, her eyes gazing a little downward from Gareda’s sight. “Well, maybe not the whole town, but more than just one or two, we think. We can confirm a few ties, though. It’s a close knit community too. I find it very unlikely this stops at just a handful.”



Gareda shook her head. “This… this cannot… Arceus almighty. And the flute piece is gone, isn’t it?”



“Yes,” Vli replied. “Either that, or they threw it into a Mystery Dungeon for no reason.”



“Then we’re in trouble,” Gareda growled between her teeth, her eyes darting around the room in search of any comfort she could get a hold of. Her sensors acted up as she realised there wasn’t any to be found. ‘Why did I order the room cleared out, damn it…’



“How do you mean?” Luffy asked. “Surely we may be able to interrogate-”



“The queen, duck face, the queen!” Gareda said, talons pointed at her face. “She demands the flute piece, and nothing but the flute piece. She has zero patience for this kind of failure, you know this! Forget about what the Alliance wants to do with the flute, we won’t see the day they’ll use it if we screw up like this!”



Luffy shivered and leaned backwards. “Y-yes, Gareda. My apologies-”



“For the love of Arceus, don’t apologise, you hear?” Gareda hissed through gritted teeth. “Either you do better, or you’re as good as dead.”



“W-well…” Vli uttered. He had his beak pointed at a wall, leaving a lone twitchy eye visible to the Garchomp sitting at the other end of the table. Gareda’s eyes narrowed out of frustration. Her sensors had detected a deep seethed fear. Of all times, just when they were teetering on the edge of the abyss.



‘Ugh, the sooner you spit it out, the sooner you won’t have to look at me anymore, bird brain.



Vli fluttered his wings out. “M-my lady, what, uh… what do we do now, then?”



Gareda crossed her arms. “First off, none of us says a word about seeing the flute. You did not see them carry it into the woods. You did not have any idea that it was even there in the village. None of us had any clue of its whereabouts, only that we have found a potential scent. A lead, nothing concrete. Is that clear?”



“Yes, very clear,” Luffy said in a hushed tone. Gareda nodded along to it, tapping her talons against one another. ‘ What a liar she is.



“If I may,” Vli then said, “do you think the Queen will find out if we cover all of this up? Because, uh, she has a real knack for finding out the truth one way or the other, and-”



“Quiet, you.”



Gareda’s words got Vli to shut up without a single pant. The window behind her being pelted by rain and wind wasn’t making things easy on her two companions. She leaned her head slightly forward; the movement was matched by Luffy and Vli both.



“I’m not about to put my neck on the line for the sake of your conscience, Vli. This is the last time you will bring this up. We will be keeping our mouths shut.”



“Gareda, I-”



The Garchomp let a growl rumble in her throat. “Listen, you bird-brained ingrate. She will have our heads on a silver platter if we blow this. She won’t stop there. I’m not going to risk that. Not. One. Bit. And if you have any ideas in that head of yours about running off and telling her anyway, then you’ll have saved yourself from Queen Patrina, but you won’t have saved yourself from me. And trust me, you won’t be saving yourself from me. Clear?”



The Toucannon froze up. It was as if he had been turned to stone. Even the courage to not look Gareda straight in her eyes was missing. “Y-yes, Lord Gareda. I understand…”



“Good.” ‘ Hopefully I’ve saved myself one hell of a headache.’



Gareda pulled her head back. The sensors on the side of her head put her at ease. Any loose lips the other side of the table might’ve had were well and truly sealed shut now. Or so she hoped.



“Right… second of all, we must move quickly against that town. We’ve got all the proof we need that there’s something going on there. First we have that wimpy Raichu running around, and then those two kids with him are caught up in this whole mess as well. We need to apprehend them, and quickly. We may be onto something big here.”



Luffy huffed a grey cloud out of her mouth. “I don’t think it will be so easy to do that. It’s a small town. Their neighbours will stand with them no matter what.”



Gareda lowered her arms past her sides. “You’re right, of course. I’m from the Dragonspine, nothing but villages up there. I know precisely what a village’s bond is like. It’ll have to be a full fledged raid. Nothing else will do.”



“Huh?” Luffy and Vli uttered simultaneously. Gareda shook her head.



‘They’re acting all surprised. Idiots .’ “If the enemy stands as one, then we will have to do so as well. It’s as simple as that. Strength in numbers always leaves an impact. If you were there in Agate Province a few years ago, when the Crest wiped out a large chunk of that damned Prince’s followers, you would understand that. This won’t be so difficult. We get a hundred of the Soldiers stationed here, we arrest who needs to be arrested, we’ll put down anyone that tries to resist, and we’re out. You’ll go get the Raichu, I’ll get the kids, simple as. No bloodshed required.” ‘Some wishful thinking that is.’



Luffy gulped. “Um, Gareda? It’s a lot more than the Raichu and the kids.”



Gareda held her arms over one another in front of her; it was as if she were meditating. “Go on.”



The Magmar wobbled back and forth on the mat, her eyes darting back and forth between Gareda and her tail bobbing up and down next to her.“We think we’ve figured out who’s been giving them the orders related to the flute. There’s a café in the town run by a… Dusknoir, yes.”



Vli nodded, and took over. “His name is Hein, and we’ve overheard him talk about the delivery of the flute. He knew it was with the children, somehow. Reason enough to intervene, I’d say. Not to mention the other-”



The Garchomp suddenly looked upwards. “Hein…”



“Is something wrong?” Vli asked, the nerves pinching on his voice.



“That name seems awfully familiar,” Gareda said, now leaning sidewards, her pupils pressing towards the direction of her right sensor. ‘ Way, way too familiar.



“Uh…”



“Change of plans, then. I will take care of this Hein. Not many have expertise in handling ghosts. Not even in the Crest’s Army.” ‘And I’d rather not use force on children. I’m not stooping that low.’



Vli and Luffy nodded along. “Sure. I’d rather not face a ghost myself,” Luffy said. “You’re way more equipped to deal with one of ‘em if something goes wrong, right?”



Gareda nodded. “If that wasn’t the case, I wouldn’t have suggested it.”



“So… when do we make our move? We have to be quick. They’ve already got what they want, and we must be quick,” Vli said. A flare in Gareda’s left sensor alerted her to a buildup of gas in the Toucannon’s beak. ‘ Spoiling for a fight, aren’t we.



“Yeah, we better hurry if we’re going to do this. How quickly does it take to prepare these things?”



Garede held a talon up. “Not long at all. We will make our move tomorrow afternoon…” she looked at the rain stained windows; the light was fading away. “If this storm lets up that is, that’ll be the earliest we can do what we have to do. If not, we’ll have to wait another day. Whatever happens, I want you two to prepare the troops to move out at a moment’s notice. We’ve got a meeting with destiny, and we’re not going to be late. Clear?”



“Clear.”



“Right. Time to get going.”



The two guardians left the room in a quick, yet inconspicuous manner. As fast as they could go without raising anyone’s ire. Gareda let it slide. Tomorrow wouldn’t be easy. No days really were, but there was always a deeper point in the abyss previously undiscovered. Tomorrow, she’d have to sink there once again. She walked over to the window, and sighed as she watched the rain fall upon Agate Township. All the hostility vanished from her eyes, leaving a sad, desperate echo behind.



‘Arceus almighty, please have mercy on our souls. Why oh why must I be stuck between the Queen and the Prince, and why do they have to be as well? Please, do not abandon us all now, not like this…’



 
Chapter 30

Gyeig

Junior Trainer
Pronouns
he/him
Partners
  1. samurott

Chapter 30 - Attacked​


The wind whisked past, causing a ball to just barely miss the door of the hovel. It bounced, fell, and rolled to a stop by Blitzer’s feet. He stared at it for some time, let out a groan, picked it up, and repeated the same process, stopping to either fiddle with his blue scarf or clutch a part of his body.

“So I guess this is what we’ll be doing today as well, huh.”

Not far from him, George was scratching alphabetical letters into the dirt, stopping after each letter to wipe the dust off his fingers. Little was more annoying than dirt under the fingernails in his book; sure enough, he had a particularly bad case of it after finishing the sentence he was writing. Grumbling, he polished his fingers, his tail kicking up a small cloud of dust with its annoyed slapping.

“What are you doing?” asked Blitzer. “Wait, are those Unown runes?” His tail audibly crackled with energy, not to mention his voice sounding energetic enough to overpower the flow of the stream a short skip away.

“Unknown runes?” George responded.

“Yeah, Unown runes. There’s some old ruins with those. My dad once showed me some in a ruin not too far from town. They kind of look like what you’re writing.”

George, now dumbfounded, turned his head. “I don’t know what you’re talking about. This is just how I’ve been taught to write, that’s all.” ‘Why is he telling me this now?’

“Oh, okay,” Blitzer replied. “What did you write?”

George smacked his lips. “‘What a waste of time.’ I felt inspired.”

“Ah.” Blitzer let out a raspy sigh. “Yeah, no surprise there. Can’t even go out into town much… ugh, these damn cramps,” he said, placing both his claws onto his head. “I’m not supposed to sit still when wearing a scarf. It’s not right. Yet here we are…”

The past two days in particular hadn’t been kind on the Charmander. His limbs hurt like they had been infected with something, and no berry was capable of easing the pain. His parents were anything but clandestine on what was affecting him, despite the cramps getting worse and worse. This morning George could only watch as Blitzer struggled to get out of bed, struggled to conjure up an appetite for breakfast for the first time, and had issues walking. It didn’t sit well with him, but there was little to be done. Anything short of pure adrenaline wasn’t going to fix things fast.

“Do… do you think you’ll get better soon?” George asked with a slightly higher pitch in his voice, his ears flat against his head.

Blitzer shook his head, frowning all the while. “I sure hope so. Dad said ‘yeah, it will’, and then he just grinned afterwards. Asked mom earlier today and she had the same silly smile on her face, as if there’s nothing to worry about… blegh.” He turned his head back towards the rest of the town, letting the ball he was throwing roll off into the grass. George got his fingers out of the dirt, and looked out over the town with him. The wind blew into their faces with surprising strength, howling into their ears and bringing a myriad of odd scents with it. As if nature itself disagreed with them looking over.

The town was largely quiet. Some residents were out buying things from their neighbours, others were at work on their houses or on the fields, some were returning from their work out of town, tugging on a cart bearing rocks or strange plants someone in the village might have needed eventually. An Aipom was busy on a roof, repairing damage inflicted by the rain a day ago. Small sprouts of green were rising up out of the field, at last. It had been some time since the last harvest was seized. Down the road, a column of Pokemon were marching into town. They wore green scarves; the crunching of their feet were loud and in sync with one another.

“Wait, what the…!” Blitzer jumped to his weary feet. “Agh! George, do you see that?”

In the blink of an eye, George had gotten up as well. “Yeah, I see it alright!”

His facial muscles were frozen solid: Some of the soldiers had their undivided attention in their direction.

‘What is this now?’

“George, let’s go back inside, okay?” Blitzer chirped, clutching onto his tail.

“Yeah. that sounds like a plan,” George said back with bated breath.

They stumbled back inside and locked the door, before running down into the living area. Nero and Nera were both there, working on some sort of wood carving. It faintly resembled a lizard. Nero looked up from his work, frowning.

“Hey, you’re not supposed to here-”

“Not now, dad! There’s a whole bunch of soldiers coming our way!”

“What?!” Nero threw the tool knife he was holding down onto the table. “What do you mean, soldiers?! Why are they here now?”

“We… we didn’t do anything wrong, did we? Haven’t they bothered us enough as is?” Nera asked.

“I don’t know what they’re here for,” Blitzer asked. “We just saw them coming, that’s all.”

George gritted his teeth. The situation was far more dire than that. They weren’t just coming. They were coming straight towards the hovel. Some had been wielding weapons.

“Kids, I don’t know what this is, but let us handle it, okay? We’ll figure something out-”

A loud bonking sound suddenly struck into the room. The candle near the entrance flickered.

“Open the door, now!”

George, Blitzer, Nero and Nera all froze. The faint light coming from outside disappeared; no one could tell why for sure. George caught a glimpse of what seemed like feet pass by the window. The presence at the entrance gave the front door another beating. It creaked with every blow.

“I said, open the door! We know you’re in there!”

Nero looked to his family; there was a glint of fear in his eyes. “I’ll handle this, stay back.”

“I’ll come with you,” Nera then said. The Nidorino shook his head. “Stay back, please,” he said, then turned to walk up to the front door, leaving the rest behind in the anxious atmosphere that had manifested in the living area.

“Yes, we can hear you just fine! What are you here for?”

“Just open the damn door, you! You know what we’re here for.”

George inched closer to Blitzer, who quickly huddled up closer to the Oshawott himself upon noticing his approach. The Charmander’s tail was producing a strong, comfortable warmth, which George highly appreciated. It was a light in the cold darkness they were stuck in. Whatever was coming next, that warmth was something he desperately needed for it.

“No… what are you talking about?” Nero answered the other side of the door. A rising growl came next from the other end.

“We know what you’ve been up to! You are harbouring supporters of the Grand Alliance in there!”

With gritted teeth, Nera took a step closer to the door. Her ears flicked backwards against her cyan blue head. George shivered, and leaned up against his friend’s orange scales. He was shivering, too. The Grand Alliance. He’d never even heard of such a thing. Or had he? Was that what Speedy had been alluding to on the road back home a few days ago?

“Alliance?! What are you talking about? We’re just living our lives here!” Nero roared back. “There’s no rebels in here, are you out of your mind?”

“Oh yes there are, and you are going to hand them over, right. NOW.” The door shifted violently in its frame.

“WHO?!” Nero screamed back.

“Your damn kids, that’s who! One Oshawott and a Charmander! They’re Alliance supporters!”

A loud thud sounded on the other side of the door. It was at this moment that George and Blitzer began cowering together. Nera turned her head around, eyeing them with disbelief. Blitzer was speechless. George didn’t even know what to think anymore. It was as if he were floating out in the middle of nowhere. A void like the one he’d seen when speaking to that strange voice in his dreams. The Grand Alliance. Was that who had been sending them messages? Was Speedy one of them? Didn’t that mean Speedy was in danger as well? What about Hein? The Tangrowth?

Whatever the answer, he was never going to find out.

“Open the damn door now, or we’re breaking it down!”

“How’s about you piss off, and don’t get near my kids!”

“So be it! Get into position, everybody!”

The presence on the other side opened a violent assault on the door. With bated breath, they watched Nero back away from the door, ears flat and crouched in a very defensive manner, like a cornered animal. Strike by strike, the door was beaten down in a rhythm of a heartbeat. George felt his own beat against his chest with every thud. Thud. Thud. Thud. Bang. Bang. Bang. BANG.

Crash.

“Run, run…!” Nera cried out, “Blitzer, George, run!!”

Like lightning, Nera tackled the two in the direction of the backroom, breaking their embrace before jumping back to face the storm alongside Nero.

“Don’t worry about us! Just get out!”

Adrenaline surged within George’s veins. Blitzer ran off into the back room, almost falling in the process, and George jumped after him. The air was cramped and dusty; George breathed in a mouthful as they rushed through the back door, into the largely empty berry fields the family owned.

“T-through the woods, fast!!”

Blitzer screamed at George as he rushed his way into the forests to the left of the house. George was gasping for breath. He tried to follow through the berry fields, escaping in the same fashion as Blitzer but couldn’t: A glance to his side revealed several green-scarved Pokemon rushing up, one a vicious mongoose and the other a yellow feline, their attention solely on him. Either he’d end up between a set of teeth, or all the secrets would be pilfered from his flesh at the tip of a claw. He ran into the forest as fast as his stubby feet would let him.

Thorns left their marks as George ran past. There was a narrow path through the vegetation, just large enough for him to pass. The rustling of the bushes sounded not far behind; his attackers were biting and clawing their way through, and the vegetation could only stall them for so long. His heart raced. He couldn’t waste a second. He’d just lost sight of Blitzer. Nero and Nera were still stuck in the hovel, their fate unknown. George didn’t want to think about it, yet those tense few moments lingered. They were eager to fight the threat on their own, even with the house surrounded.

Sun shone through a gap in the trees, revealing an empty space just ahead. George sped up, jumping his way between two thorny vines that hung at ankle and head level. A roar sounded behind. He rushed into the light. Two paths lay in front of him, left and right; he rushed left without thinking. The more distance, the better.

Lightning crackled overhead as the shroud of the trees fell back over him, striking a large branch of a tree dead ahead. A sharp crack echoed through the forest; the branch split off and tumbled down. George threw himself forward onto his scalchop with a gasp; the bark missed the back of his head by a hair. A hiss rang in his ears, followed by a second crackle further back. In the blink of an eye, a thunder roared overhead, striking the tree just past the last at the stump with a force strong enough to shred the base. George, having barely pushed himself off the ground, stumbled forward. The whole tree tipped over, missing him, but landing precariously onto the fallen branch. George ran. He didn’t look back.

“You fool! Now what?!”

“I’m tryin’ me best!”

Voices fading away under the rhythm of his heart, George ran. The forest grew more spacious; he had reached a path the villagers must’ve used to gather wood. He glanced around; no one to his left, no one to his right, torchlight ahead. Torchlight. No, tail light. He almost jumped for joy, before rushing ahead, fighting his way through ivy towards the flame he saw burning in the distance. He was there. He had to be there. It was like his feet were floating. He was that close to safety, that close to having a chance. There was no time to look back. He rushed forward, through the bushes.

“HAAGH!”

A claw grabbed him by the neck; George had ample time to yelp before he was face to face with a snarling Charmander. The snarl quickly disintegrated into shock, then horror.

“G-George!” a familiar voice said. It came from the Charmander’s mouth. “S-sorry, I couldn’t-”

Blitzer choked on his own words as he put George back down. George hesitated for a second. For a brief second, his own friend saw him as an enemy. Had that continued for a second, his face would’ve been scorched clean off. “Blitzer,” he muttered. A pained glister appeared in the Charmander’s eyes.

“I swear, I didn’t mean to… I heard the bushes move and I thought you were one of them, so I…”

A shaky breath freed itself from Blitzer’s jaws. It was accompanied by a soft, weak chittering sound.

George idled, letting the beat of his heart and rhythm of his lungs talk in his stead. He felt Blitzer’s breath on his face. It was as if he was standing in front of a campfire. All it took was one slippery step to destroy a whole world. He shook his head. There was no time to dawdle.

“Forget about it, we need to-”

A branch snapped from the path leading leftwards. George’s head shot in the direction of the sound. A set of yellow, fuzzy legs was fast approaching, the wind carrying an accompanying hiss.

“There you are, you little scamps!”

A Galvantula whose legs bore green patches bearing the Crest crept towards them, electricity crackling around its mandibles. It appeared to charge up for a strong attack. George put his arms up to shield his face. Any second now, lightning would strike him head on, when he heard a growl right next to him. Blitzer had snapped out of his stupor; his throat vibrated ferociously, something George now knew to be the warning before the firestorm.

‘Get him! Get him good!’

But the Galvantula wasn’t an ordinary bug like the ones Blitzer was so used to fighting. Seeing the buildup in the Charmander’s throat, it struck early, shooting an electrified string out. It hit Blitzer in the foot, causing him to gag and start coughing intensively, spitting out smoke instead of fire.

“Agh, aagh…!”

The smoke enveloped the area at alarming speed: In what couldn’t have been more than a second, George lost sight of the Galvantula, the trees, even Blitzer’s outline was hard to make out. He reached into the smoke, grabbed the Charmander by the hand, and pulled him away from where the soldier was standing. Electricity hissed behind their backs now, in a way that sounded as if something was being charged. George felt a chill in his body, instincts pushing him to keep his head low. ‘Something is going to happen’, he repeated to himself in his head, before the hiss reached an apex; a beam of energy cut through the smoke, passing just overhead, right where the top of his head had just been.

“Haagh, ack, ack…”

The two broke through Blitzer’s smokescreen, and went on the run. A thick branch lay on their path, which they had to jump over; a second beam passed just overhead - once again, George somehow felt it before it had actually struck, as if the attack had been telegraphed. The Galvantula soldier couldn’t have been far off; it must have seen them jumping. George gritted his teeth and tugged harder on Blitzer’s arm, which felt increasingly heavy with each passing second.

“George, George, I don’t feel good at all…”

The Charmander’s pleas fell on deaf ears. A bend in the road up ahead was their lone respite, even if it was just for a few seconds. George looked over his shoulder and saw the Galvantula creep over the branch. ‘Not good,’ he thought, pushing himself to speed up even further, in spite of the struggle Blitzer was giving him. They had to make distance, and fast.

“George… aargh!”

Upon reaching the bend, Blitzer let out a pained cry. As they passed through, that cry intensified into sheer agony. George’s grip on the Charmander’s arm faded as if the arm had been torn off; Blitzer lunged forward onto his knees, panting and heaving, his tail crackling with intense spikes in energy. He stared out in front of him, eyes wide and unfocused, propping himself up on shaky arms. George reached for his arm, desperately trying to make him stand back up.

“Blitzer, we’ve got to get out of here!”

“I can’t…”

“What do you mean, you can’t?”

“My legs hurt… my head too, I feel like my body is falling apart…!”

Blitzer rolled onto his back, heaving with his claws on his head. The adrenaline had done what it could, but couldn’t last forever. George, now scared, took a step backwards. This wasn’t pain, it was worse than that. Blitzer’s skin was shivering, as if a horde of tiny insects were stuck underneath, trying to escape. He was stuck on the ground, kicking his limbs around, screaming at the top of his lungs as his body seemed to be ripping itself apart.

George’s breaths intensified. He had to help. But there wasn’t anything he could do. Nothing except stay at his side, and watch him suffer as the Soldiers inevitably caught up with them. In the blink of an eye, his hopes of getting through this were destroyed. Even if he did by some miracle evade capture, what was the point? He’d have lost everything. He’d be all alone in the forest, shelterless, foodless, and friendless. The last one stung deeper than the others, by a long shot. He hung his head and tail low. For a brief second, he thought he saw a shimmer of light.

“There you are,” a hushed, sharp voice said from beside. George didn’t look. The sound of the twitching mandibles was hard enough to hear. “It was about time you gave up.”

The Galvantula spoke with a pronounced hiss. Her eyes were cold, and calculating. Not a shred of empathy could be expected: She came straight for George with clattering mandibles, bypassing the Charmander twitching and growling on the ground next to her.
“So, we can do this one of two ways. Either you will come with me right this second, or I will resort to option two.”

George took a small step sideways. “Get lost.”

“Sweetheart, I’m afraid that’s not an option here,” the Galvantula said in a mocking tone. “I know I won’t be going anywhere anytime soon. Not without you.”

“What do you want?” asked George with a slap of his tail. The Galvantula made an obnoxious chattering sound in response; it had the tone of laughter.

“A diversion! How unfortunate for you that I do not fall for people playing dumb. We know what you’ve been up to. We know how you’ve helped members of the Alliance. Don’t pretend like you haven’t.”

George clenched his fist. “And that’s why you’re trying to kill us?” he said through gritted teeth, inching away from the Galvantula which matched his every step. Even with his ears flat against his head, he could hear each of the spider’s feet move over the dull growling that sounded nearby.

“Traitors generally do not get mercy, little one. This is just a way of telling you and the rest of your friends that we know what you’re up to,” the Galvantula said as shimmers of silver light flashed behind her. “So… are you going to give this little protest up, or are you going to make this more difficult?”

“I already told you to get lost.”

“Sweetheart, don’t make me go for option two-”

“Get lost!” George yelled, shooting a jet of water at his mouth. It rushed to the Galvantula and hit her point blank, sending her sliding back across the dirt but holding steady, thick stripes running through the dirt from the grip of her feet. She shook her head and hissed, a ravenous shine appearing in her four eyes.

“So be it then!”

She twisted her body around, electricity gathering around her abdomen with a hiss. With the speed of an arrow razing through the air, an electrified web shot out towards George; he hardly knew what was happening before he was hit. He fell backwards onto the ground, wrapped tight in a blanket of silk which started to constrict up against his body.

The silver light intensified as the web squeezed George with high voltage, causing him to scream out. It was as if the web was cutting through his skin, scorching everything in its vicinity. He wildly flailed his arms at the web, accomplishing little besides sending additional waves of electricity through his body. The agony made him gasp for breath. It was like his lungs were full of fire.

One foot then stomped down on George’s arm. His other arm was pinned in the same fashion. Two mandibles were hovering precariously over his neck. The pain dulled somewhat, but the dirty work had been done. The terror that spread through George’s body at this time, now that he finally realized the hopelessness of the situation he’d gotten himself into, must’ve been a joy for the Galvantula standing on top of him.

“I told you to not make me go there…”

His throat felt dry, and a little wetness found its way to his eyes. He wanted to scream, but couldn’t.

“Do you see now? One more chance. You come with me, and I promise it won’t be so painful.”

Her legs pressed harder against his skin. George panted, and looked at the mandibles creeping up to his neck. It wasn’t much of a choice. Either a vague promise, or a quick death. The hissing, venomous tone of the Galvantula stood out to him. ‘She’s lying…’ he thought, gritting his teeth. The Galvantula hissed at him, when a sharp cry rang through the air.


An orange ball rammed into the Galvantula’s side, exploding into fiery cinders. The spider was thrown off George with a horrid cry, its hairs cindered down and the Crests on the same side scorched. George immediately gasped for air, rolling and struggling his way out of the web.

“What the… what just happened?”

He rubbed his head as he got back onto his feet. For a second, he was lost. How was he free? Blitzer was down on the ground, screaming in pain, wasn’t he? Did he somehow get a last ditch shot in? Those questions were rushing through George’s head, but then vanished without a trace as he turned his gaze back up. There was no Charmander lying on the floor anymore. There was no Charmander to be seen anywhere. Instead, standing at the spot where Blitzer fell, was a sight for sore eyes. A strong, tall flame. A red body. A horn protruding from his head: Blitzer stood tall and proud, angrily staring down the injured Galvantula with bare teeth and spread claws.

“Did you think I was done for?!”

With a roar, the red Blitzer unleashed a gout of fire from his mouth, the flame on his tail surging along with him. The Galvantula hastily leapt out of the way, but Blitzer was fast on her rear, forcing her to leap even further to avoid a fiery end. Her jumps were anything but graceful, each landing was accompanied by a swift but sharp hiss as her yellow body dipped against the ground. Blitzer chased her with every jump. No longer did his feet buckle, or his tail sway unnaturally. This was the Blitzer George knew. He watched with a beaming smile on his face.

‘He… he looks awesome!’

“Graah! You can’t run forever!”

As the Galvantula leapt away to whatever hole she’d spawned from, Blitzer closed his mouth, beating himself on the chest with a fist a few times out of glee. “Ha… serves you right, ya witch!” he said with a growl, then turned around with a wild sway of his tail. His eyes locked with George, who reflexively stepped back; a bubble of saliva slid into his throat.

‘And pretty damn scary too, actually.’

Blitzer ran up to him and fell onto one of his knees. He’d gained a head on George, and he had already been taller prior to thatl. George let a hand rest on his scalchop. This was going to take some time to get used to.

“George, George! You okay?”

“Yeah, I’ll be fine,” George said. “What was that?”

“I… I evolved, George!” Blitzer cheerily chortled, holding his claws before his face. “And the cramps are gone, too!”

“Yeah, I can tell! You look so much stronger now, this is amazing- ah!” George hissed out his breath. A static shock passed through his body.

“Damnit,” Blitzer growled, “she got you good… Can’t go back for the others like this.”

“The others?” George said between gritted teeth; the leftover static was still leaving its mark.

“Yeah, the others! We can’t just leave all our friends back there,” Blitzer said, spitting drops of hot saliva over George’s face. He spoke with a vigour that wasn’t there before. Something deeper had to have changed within him. George gestured out to the trail further behind.

“We can’t, they’re still following us, agh.”

An itch in his throat made George reconsider what he was saying. Blitzer scowled right at him.

“We can’t?! My mom and dad are there! Our friends, George! They’re attacking my whole world, I can’t just leave them behind!”

Voices rang through the woods from beyond the bend. “They went this way, right?”

“Yes, and one of them just evolved. They’re tougher than they look!”

Blitzer sucked in a breath. “Argh, not now! Okay, can you run?!”

“Yes, let’s go already!”

The two ran off further along the trail, each step putting more space between them and the village. The Soldiers weren’t far behind; a Heracross and a Talonflame weren’t far behind, their green scarves waving through the wind. If they didn’t rush, the two Soldiers would undoubtedly catch up. Blitzer was constantly looking over his shoulder; he ran a lot quicker than George could now,did, and slowed down so he could catch up, even after George told him not to.

They made their way through thick and thin trails, past yellow bulbs that shrieked when they walked past. Bushes full of thorns and other thick vegetation stood in their way; Blitzer cut through them with his claws like a hot knife through butter; his motions seemed effortless to the eye. George could tell they were still being chased, however. It wasn’t just from behind, either. He felt two presences nearby, right in front of them, in fact. One was warm, the other cold and idle. Had the Soldiers gotten around them? Had others escaped the village?

Their run came to an end at the shore of a large pond. Blitzer tried making his way around, and George didn’t have much of an option but to follow; the water was cool to the touch: Heaven for him, not so much for Blitzer. A screech came from behind, and chittering wings followed shortly thereafter. They ran, and it was a good run, but they were too slow; the two Soldiers overtook them by a short strip on the edge.

“There ye are! On yer bellies!”

A wild wind rushed past. The next thing George felt was a talon making contact with his back, followed by the taste of mud being forced into his mouth. Small lumps of dirt scratched his skin as the Talonflame slid him to a stop, like a rodent being seized by a hawk. A gasp escaped his throat on the way down; he was silenced shortly thereafter. Blitzer fared little better; he went down from the Heracross slamming into him with the full weight of its body, defiantly gritting his teeth as the Beetle took hold of his horn.

“Enough runnin’, yer comin with us!”

“Blegh, not if I have anything to say- nghr!”

The Heracross pressed the tip of its horn against the back of Blitzer’s neck. “Quiet, Ruby trash.”

“You’ve been a real headache for us, you know that, right?” the Talonflame holding George screeched towards Blitzer. “All this running, and for what? One big waste of everyone’s time.”

“Just tell us, what you want from, from us,” George struggled to say. The talon holding him was pressing him further into the ground, squeezing his lungs in the process. Yet he had to ask, even if it didn’t matter now. ‘What for’ was right, just why where the Soldiers here? They had struck the village like a scythe through a field of wheat. It couldn’t have been much more than an hour ago that Blitzer was asking about his writing. Why did they come here? Just to spread terror? Were they after something?

The lone answer George got was a cackling laugh from the Talonflame.

“Lad, feel free to spill your guts to the interrogator later, okay? I don’t care about what you have to say..”

The wings of the Talonflame conjured up an updraft; George felt his body be lifted up from the ground. A tear crept out of both eyes. It was over. He didn’t even know why, but it was over. Humiliated and unable to speak, listening to the angry yelling of his best friend as the Heracross holding him in place lifted up the ground with heavy chittering of his wings. This was no way to meet the end. No diginity, no grace of any kind, just carried off like prey, as stones started zipping past.

“AAAAH!”

The talon holding George let go all of a sudden, as stones the size of a human fist zipped past like spears. One struck the Talonflame in the wing, snapping the bone with an audible crack. George fell back onto the ground with a thud, the screeching of the Talonflame and the rocks swooshing by ringing in his ears. He felt a cut on his back and a prickling in his chest roughly around the spot of his scalchop as he looked back up in a hurry.

‘What now?!’

The source of the rocks was nowhere in sight. Instead, he saw Blitzer on his knees nursing a blemish on the back of his neck, and the Heracross suspended in mid air for a brief moment. There was a strange energy in the air. A tether of sorts. George didn’t quite understand it, yet felt its presence. It was like seeing the silhouette of someone you knew and loved in the middle of a dark night.

Suddenly, a force flowed through the energy, and the Heracross was sent flying across the lake with a high pitched chittering left in its wake. It fell onto the water, bounced, and skipped along across the water, its body twisting and contorting in ways that seemed far too violent to be natural. The two sat and watched. Stunned was putting it mildly.

“What.. the actual…”

Blitzer’s tail flame crackled up and down. George got up and walked towards him, trying his hardest to ignore the cut on his back.

“Did, did you just see what I saw?!”

“I sure did…” Blitzer groaned in response. George shook his head as his tail started tapping the ground at his feet. Had the world been sucked up into a tornado? A vortex of utter insanity? First the Soldiers marching, then the chase, then Blitzer’s sudden evolution, all the way to this. There’s only one fitting question running through his mind.

“What is even happening?!”

“We’re happenin’, kid.”

George’s ears went up from the sound of a gruff, rough voice. The thud of a large foot crushing into the ground came out of the bushes; Blitzer’s tail spiked with anxiety. They had guests. One was a tall, broad, dinosaurian Pokemon with a steel body, and floating right next to him was a psychic that resembled a green haired woman. Both wore black scarves with silver medallions. George felt a strange wave come over him. As if these were familiar faces he was seeing.

“Fine time to get outta here, don’t ya say?” the dinosaur grunted.

“Who are you?” Blitzer growled; the woman held out a hand.

“There’s no time to explain everything now. We need to get you to safety first.”
 

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Hi Gyeig. Jumping in with a quick drive-by review for Diner’s review event! I'll be covering chapters 7 today, and will hopefully be back for more later in the event.

Impressions first before I get to overall thoughts.

I think it's really cute that Blitzer is so excited to use his fire to clear them a path. But at these same time, he’s cognizant of the destructive power of fire and that he needs to be careful not to overdo it. I feel like it matches his established personality well.

I love the scene setting you do for the mystery dungeon. It's just descriptive enough to give me a strong impression without overstaying its welcome. And just eerie enough to give the slightest sense of unease. Unease that'a compounded by George’s reaction.

Poisonous berries, huh? I doubt it'll be of much, if any, importance, but I do find myself wondering if we’re dealing with real poison berries, or something like the lookalike Oren's.

I wonder when Blitzer’s tendency to run off without listening is going to get these two in trouble. It's bound to happen eventually. And it looks like it did not too long after. For the moment he seems to have learned his lesson, but I wonder if it's going to stick.

Blitzer threw his basket aside and held his claws out in front of him.

This isn't a big deal and is very much a nitpick, but the visual of him throwing the basket, as opposed to just dropping it, feels a bit off. Wouldn’t there be a chance of spilling and/or damaging the berries they'd already gathered?

I like that the fight felt fast, mostly snappy, and intense. Really got across the vibe of two animals scuffling.

In the end, he couldn’t run or hide from this. Then, when another sent the hairs on the back of his head upright. It was time to bite the bullet. He threw down his basket and held his hands up.

I think there may be a missing sentence or two here, as I'm having trouble parsing the meaning.

I can't help but feel a bit confused as to why Blitzer started climbing the cliff. Yes, it would get him to the top without all the walking back and forth, but he had to drop his basket to do it and if they're gathering berries I feel like that defeats the point.

Now that said, I like that George, when put in a tough situation, finally managed to use a water attack! It was always in him, he just needed to be in the right situation to draw out that power.

Okay, time for overall thoughts. While we are still in a pretty low stakes part of the story, I do feel like this chapter was important and served a purpose. It furthers the dynamic that Blitzer and George already have. It better establishes George’s low self esteem and struggles with learning how to be a pokemon. And it furthers the development of his abilities, with him able to shoot water by the end.

I do have some nitpicks, but they're mostly minor and I've already covered them in my impressions. The only notable one was my point about Blitzer deciding to climb. Like I said, I'm struggling to understand his decision to do so, outside of impulsiveness.

But in general, I think this is a good chapter, and that cliffhanger makes me want to read more. So until next time, take care.
 
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