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yooloo33

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Hello Reader!
Firstly, I just want to say thank you for taking the time to read this story. In this chapter, I just want to talk about a few things regarding this fic, as well as what inspired it as well as get the administrative things out of the way. If you don't care, or just want to get into the story, go ahead! The first chapter is right below this. In any event, I sincerely hope that you enjoy this story and get as much out of it by reading as I did by writing it. Also, I would love any feedback! I'm always looking for feedback from readers because you engage with the story in a different way than I do, and ultimately, you are who I'm writing the story for. If you like the story, tell me why. If you hated it, fire away! As long as you can tell me what I did right/wrong, and it's relevant to the writing of the story go right ahead.

Now onto the reason I'm writing this fic. I want to say that I really appreciate you all for welcoming me back even after what feels like an eternity. I posted a fic on here about three years ago. It... wasn't my best work but it was my first and ultimately it was what set me on the journey I am on right now. After finishing The Only Way (and like I said I would in the Acknowledgements section of it) I started on a non-pokemon story. Of course, it was a spy story but the writing was truly mine. I finished it up around November, 2023 and am currently in the process of editing it for what seems like the 100th time. Since then, I pounded off a sequel to that story and that book is on mothballs until I finish the editing process on the first one. But then, I ran into a problem; I really REALLY wanted to get my work published. I won't bog you down with all the details of the hell that is querying agents with book proposals, but suffice it to say that a full year of trying, and about 60 different queries later, and there haven't even been nibbles. As is pretty obvious, I became really frustrated with the whole thing and honestly, began to daydream about the "simpler times" where there wasn't all this complexity about making a "marketable product" which was more likely to sell. Don't get me wrong, I love my work, but there is this baggage which can be stressful, especially with querying hell. So, after playing a TON of pokemon recently, I decided to start in on another story.

This is a joywrite, pure and simple. I'm writing this fast and loose, so there's going to be spelling errors and small mistakes throughout, but nothing as egregious. If you read this fic, expect a lot of fanservice, intensity and converging plotlines. I want this to be an entertaining story and I hope you will find it so.

Probably when I'm done, I'll list my inspirations, but for now, know the net for this is cast very wide. You can expect the genre to change chapter by chapter.

Finally, here are the current content warnings (I will add to them as the story progresses):
Violence/bloodshead
Gore



Thank you for reading my work. I hope you enjoy it!
 
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Chapter 1: The Symphony of Destruction New

yooloo33

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  1. tyranitar-mega

Chapter 1: The Symphony of Destruction​


I tiredly pushed open the door to my small house and sighed as I inhaled the familiar, comforting scent. Somehow, office work simply didn’t resonate with me. Heading into the kitchen, I grabbed a beer from the fridge and an apple from the bowl of fruit on the table. I loosened my tie and kicked off my dress shoes before plopping down in an overstuffed chair in front of the TV and smiling contentedly. It was Friday. Another week gone, and I was still hanging in there, somehow. I took a sip of my beer and then reached over, pressing the buttons on three pokeballs which had been resting on the end table next to my seat. There were cries of happiness as my three pokemon were released.
“Hey guys,” I said, “sorry I’m home late.”
Lucy, my Dragapult grumbled something in her phantasmal tone. Incensed, Harriet, my Tinkaton slapped the dragon, playfully.
Clayton, my Corviknight cooed, gently as he towered over the other two. Despite being much taller than Lucy and Harriet, he was easily the most gentile of my pokemon. Having been rescued from a poacher, he preferred to withdraw to the background and go unnoticed, although that tended to be quite difficult for the seven foot tall steel bird.
Lucy stuck her head out and I scratched it, being rewarded with a satisfied growl from the eldritch dragon. Her two babies were asleep in the two holsters on either side of her head. Toil and Trouble spent almost all of their time sleeping, only waking up for feeding time or when their mother wanted to shoot them through the air.
I sat back and closed my eyes. All three of my pokemon were substantially powerful, but I’d lived with them for years at this point. All of them, except for Clayton, had been raised from eggs and the bond we shared was unbreakable. My three pokemon and I were so mentally connected, that I was able to meld with them on a mental level. However, it was a one way street. Pokemon couldn’t send thoughts back to me. This phenomenon wasn’t unique. Many talented trainers had it. There was only one recorded instance of a Unovan trainer who could read the thoughts of his pokemon. Still, the telepathic avenue between myself and my pokemon was very handy, especially in battle.
I must have nodded off, because when I awoke, the entire room was darker than it had been before. A telephone in my bedroom was ringing. I leapt up from the couch and raced to the room. Judging by the lighting, it was about 5:45 or 6 PM, and the sun was starting to set.
The ringing phone wasn’t the ordinary house line. That was plugged into the wall in the kitchen. This one was a special line directly wired into the city’s power grid through its own independent connection. It had a 72 hour battery life in case the power was cut and an encoding system which made the words spoken on the line nye impossible for a potential third party to understand.
I picked up the phone. “Hello?”
“Is this Vanguard 3?” A female voice which I didn’t recognize asked. Her voice quivered but she was doing her best to hide her fear.
“This is him. Go ahead.”
“I…I need your callsign please,” she responded.
“Name: Nico Barnes, primary callsign: Vanguard 3, secondary callsign: Delta Tango Six,” I rattled off the information clearly, and concisely.
“We have a code Absol. I repeat, code Absol,” the fear had taken full control of the woman's voice now.
My heart began to thud in my chest, “where at?”
“They’re… everywhere!” She was beginning to panic.
“How so?”
Just then, I heard a crash outside my window, followed by a scream. I rushed over and pulled the curtain back.
Ordinarily, Pallet Town was a small, peaceful town. It was a sleepy place with a very relaxed atmosphere. People, be it retirees or adults sick of the busy city life, came here to slow down. To live a lifestyle that didn’t force you to be on the go 24/7. All of the architecture in the town except for the pokemon lab was old but charming. Everything about this place was calm.
What I saw outside was anything but that.
The small town had been thrown into chaos. Houses and lawns were burning, cars were smashed and all nature of destruction had been sewn. An entire block of houses were on fire, casting a crimson glow into the fading light of dusk. Down the street, about two blocks away from my window, I counted three trainers, and probably around 50 pokemon chaotically teeming around them. Each of the trainers was clad in a black bodysuit, black gloves and boots, all with no identifying markers. The force methodically was slowly moving down the streets, scanning my block for anyone who might oppose them. The trainer in front had a Delphox released. Every so often, he would gesture with his hand, and the magical fox would send a column of flame towards wherever the trainer indicated it, usually a building or a car.
I ducked away from the window and raced over to my closet, “what the hell is going on?” I hissed into the phone.
“We don’t know! They all appeared at once!”
“Where’d they come from?” I drew out a blue gym bag and a black satchel.
“Again, we don’t know. All we know is that all the attacks happened at once.”
A code Absol was for something like this exact situation. Absol, being the disaster pokemon, was the representative of the current situation we were in. Our communication with command had been cut. It was just as Red had feared.
I tore my dress shirt off, not bothering with the buttons and yanked on a black, form fitting, long sleeve, polyester turtleneck.
“What’s my objective?” I questioned, switching out my slacks for a pair of cargo pants.
“City hall,” the woman said, “you need to make sure they haven’t gotten to the mayor yet.”
“Copy,” I unzipped the duffel bag and began to stuff my satchel’s pockets with all manner of useful equipment. Everything from extra pokeballs, gauze and rations. This assignment was not to be underestimated and something told me that in this situation it was better to be safe than sorry. I fit a utility belt around my waist and holstered three stealthy dusk balls for nighttime use.
As I slipped on a pair of black hiking boots, I spoke to the woman once again, “stay on the line with me for as long as you can.”
What I didn’t expect to hear on the other end was a sob.
“I can’t,” The woman’s voice was noticeably weaker than before.
“What? Why not?”
“They got here first, Nico... Took out everyone in the command center…” she coughed “Lurantis ran me through… thought I was dead…” the woman’s voice was becoming more and more faint.
“No no stay with me.” I desperately called into the phone.
“You’re the only one left, Nico… Baxcalibur… only agent still active…”
The line went dead.
I stared at the phone in my hand for a moment. That couldn’t be, right? The Baxcalibur program was vast, spanning the entire region, the Sevil Islands, and parts of northern Johto. There was no way I was the last one left standing.
Another scream of fear from outside brought me into the present. I holstered the phone on my belt, tugged on an olive green fleece jacket and called Lucy, Hariet and Clayton into the dusk balls on my belt.
A glance outside revealed that an inferno was beginning to burn across the street. The attackers, whoever they were, were rounding up citizens and carrying them off.
If I didn’t want to be detected, it was time to move. A fingerless gloved hand turned the handle of the door and I stepped outside.
Something told me that I wouldn’t be back here for a long time.

***​

As I skirted between the houses, I felt oddly calm. The Absol Protocall wasn’t something that I expected to ever be enacted, much less the town I was assigned to be invaded. In all honesty, I had been disappointed to be given the assignment to live undercover in Pallet. If there was ever to be an attack on Kanto, it wasn’t going to start in this city. But here I was. If the woman was to be believed, I was the only one to respond to the Absol Protocall. That had to be untrue. The agency I worked for was far too compartmentalized for her to know every nook and cranny of it. More agents had to be out there. I just needed to rendezvous with them and get more information.
As I moved closer to the city hall, the buildings became larger and more tightly packed. Storefronts and a few apartments ran the length of main street. I knew that one of the roads off of main street eventually turned into the long drive up the hill to the pokemon lab.
Downtown was terrifyingly silent and dark. Despite it being a small town, Pallet still had a little bit of a nightlife, and a decent tourism sector. However, right now, there was absolutely nobody around. I peeked around the corner of a building and looked down the eerily desolate main street.
The sound of voices and glass breaking halted me in my tracks.
“Glad we’re breaking in here. I’m famished,” I heard a voice say.
“Me too. We haven’t eaten since this morning.”
There was the sound of glass crunching as two pairs of feet entered a bakery through the broken front window.
I began to slowly ease myself away from the broken storefront, back behind a large brick building. I was about to breathe a sigh of relief, when I heard a low growl. Turning, I saw an enormous dog baring its teeth at me. The creature’s eyes were slits and its fangs could rip me in half.
I didn’t know how it had snuck up on me so quietly, but the beast was so close that I could feel its fiery breath curl the hairs on my arms. Slowly, I extended my thoughts out to my pokemon, mentally connecting with Lucy, Harriet and Clayton and letting them know of my plan.
I raised my arms in a placating gesture, trying to calm the hound. Instead, the Houndoom lunged forwards and snapped at me.
Before my brain could process what was happening, I spun out of the way and drew a pokeball. The Houndoom skidded to a halt. Silently, Harriet emerged from her ball. Before Houndoom could react, Harriet spun in a full circle and clubbed the demon dog across the nose with the flat end of her mallet. There was a dull thonk and a yelp from the creature. I doubted that Harriet had hurt it much with the steel attack, but Houndoom were pack hunters. If any resistance was given, they wouldn’t push me any further.
Sure enough, after a moment of hesitation, the dog turned tail and ran.
I returned Harriet and paused for a moment. Where was Houndoom’s trainer?
I had just finished processing the thought when I heard the two voices again:
“Did you hear that?”
“Yeah!” Followed by footsteps approaching.
I snapped my dusk ball back onto my belt and hastily retreated away from main street. Maybe, if I had the drop on the two trainers, I’d be able to take them out. Lucy had two very sharp, aerodynamic children, after all. However, that would make far too much noise, and from what I had gathered, the enormous attacking force was far too large to justify such a full frontal assault.
As I moved between the buildings, towards city hall, I heard disturbing sounds coming from inside. Roars of pokemon, screams of terror, shouts of trainers giving commands. Apparently there were a few people still giving resistance to the mysterious attackers. Despite that, I doubted that would be very long lived. From what little I had gathered, it was easy to tell that these trainers were well equipped and talented.
Finally, I reached city hall. As far as I could tell, I was still undetected. The building wasn’t imposing, a relic from when Pallet Town was far smaller.
I paused for a moment to scan the area. From what I could tell, there weren’t any attackers in sight. They all seemed to have moved on towards Northern Pallet. This was my chance.
I dashed out from behind a large tree, and leapt up the steps to the hall two at a time. I thrust my shoulder against the door, but it didn’t budge. Confused, I checked the latch. The door wasn’t locked. I shoved my shoulder against the door again, it shifted a little bit. Something was blocking the door from the inside. Maybe whoever was in here had barricaded the door?
On the fourth attempt, I managed to force open the door wide enough to squeeze through. As I entered the room, I tripped over something laying on the ground. After catching my feet, I turned around and had to suppress a cry of horror.
Laying on the ground was a man and a pokemon. The man wore a security guard’s outfit. Next to him was a large yellow and black cat -- a Luxray. The large cat had been the reason for my difficult entry into the building.
That wasn’t what had surprised me, however. The security guard’s throat had been slit, and the Luxray had been pummeled so badly that I could see brutal purple bruising across its entire body. Whoever had attacked them had left nothing to chance.
Worriedly, I began to move into the building proper. Everywhere I looked, there was carnage. Apparently, the mayor had tried to rally his people together and hole up in city hall.
It hadn’t worked.
Fainted and dead pokemon littered the hallways. People; employees of the mayor and civilian trainers alike had been brutally executed. I had to suppress a gag. There was an almost sadistic creativity in the different ways these people had been murdered.
It felt like hours, but probably was only a matter of moments until I reached the main meeting room.
I looked inside and it was just as I had feared. At least 11 bodies littered the ground. I assumed this to be an attempt at a command center. There was one woman in a lab coat, presumably the ranking resident from the pokemon lab. Multiple city council members lay among the gore as well as two wiry men in suits; heads of the only bank in Pallet. Some of the bodies didn't have all their limbs attached, and some were horrifically burned, as if someone had thrown a grenade into the room. At the front, slumped against the pulpit was the mayor.
A Pallet town native, he had been a gym challenger in his youth, and once he grew out of his prime, he’d taken up politics. From what I had heard, he’d been a good leader, causing his sleepy hometown to flourish. The mayor had made his last stand at the front of the room. Next to him lay his trusty companion: Blastoise. Between its giant paws was the body of someone who I assumed was one of the invading trainers. The body had been almost broken in two before the Blastoise had succumbed. Another body in a black bodysuit lay on the other side of the room, also very clearly Blastoise’s doing.
However, whatever they had done, it hadn’t been enough.
I crouched low to the body, wondering what I was going to do now. I was supposed to try and save these people, but I’d been late. The mayor had met his end by some sort of electrical shock, judging by the burns and smell coming off him. I assumed his pokemon had been subjected to the same fate.
With a heavy heart, I closed the stunned eyes of the noble trainer. He deserved more dignity than to be slaughtered and forgotten about. I gently adjusted his shoulders and legs so it looked like he and his pokemon were simply resting after a long speech. His right fist was clenched. I reached down and splayed his fingers open into a more natural position.
To my surprise, a piece of paper fell out of his hand, to the ground. Confused, I reached down and picked the note up.
The piece of paper was crumpled from his hand, and part of it was blackened, however, desperately scribbled on the post-it-note were two words:

Pewter City

I furrowed my eyebrows. Was that note for me? Why else would a dying trainer have such a message be his last words? That had to be the message for me, right? I examined the paper some more. There was nothing else on the back.
The sound of footsteps in the hallway interrupted my thoughts. Without a moment’s hesitation, I burst into action, rushing to the door and drawing a pokeball.
“Dart!” I shouted as I threw Dragapult into the hallway.
Lucy appeared and roared her spectral cry. As she fully materialized, a gout of flame collided with her. Luckily, the dragon absorbed the fire as she launched Toil towards my unseen attacker. There was a hypersonic scream of glee as the baby Dreepy shot towards the target.
“Again!” I called.
Instantly, Trouble followed his brother down the hallway.
I leapt into the confined space, with Harriet’s pokeball at the ready, however there was only the fainted body of a Pinsir on the ground. The new attacker must have ducked into a room somewhere to avoid Lucy’s supersonic children.
Toil and Trouble shot past me, back to their mother and into the holsters on the side of her head.
“Cover me,” I muttered to Lucy, before sprinting down the hallway.
I was about halfway to the staircase which led to the entrance, when I saw movement out of the corner of my eye. A human figure in a stealthy black bodysuit lunged from a side room and tried to tackle me.
I didn’t even slow down. There was a shrieking sound from behind me, followed by a grunt. I doubted the attack had killed the person. Toil and Trouble usually needed a few moments before they could be shot at full power again, however, it was enough to derail the trainer’s attempt to hinder my escape.
Pointing the pokeball behind me, I called Dragapult back and leapt down the stairs into the main entrance. I dashed past the security guard and out into the cold evening. Mid stride, I summoned Clayton in front of me. He crouched low, allowing me to leap onto his back. He cawed, defiantly and began to flap his mighty metal wings.
We were off the ground in moments and a few seconds later, Pallet town was receding behind us. Below, fires burned uncontrollably. Buildings were leveled, and small specks moved through the destruction, undoubtedly seeking to do more damage.
Before anybody could notice me or my bird, I tapped on Clayton’s neck and whispered: “Go.”
Clayton huffed in a huge puff of air and then shot forwards, traveling away from the sea. I could see Route 1 up ahead, and the Viridian Forest beyond that. I had failed in Pallet Town. Maybe that message wasn’t for me but either way, I couldn’t stay here. If this attack was as expansive as I feared, I didn’t know what to expect when I landed in Pewter.
Nevertheless, that was where I would go.
 

DroopyMcCool

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Hi there! This story caught my eye because it really reminds me of something I would have written when I was younger. Exciting start!

Typical format for fanfic on forums is double-spacing between paragraphs. Most forums can't handle indents, which is how it's typically done in real novels, so that's what we do to make stories less of an intimidating block of text.

he was easily the most gentile of my pokemon
gentile->gentle (I assume, but maybe you mean he's the only one who isn't Jewish haha)

called Lucy, Hariet and Clayton into the dusk balls on my belt.
Hariet->Harriet

Quick tip: I like to add names and Pokémon terms to the dictionary of my word processor of choice so that I don't get in the habit of ignoring the red underlines.

The Absol Protocall wasn’t something that I expected to ever be enacted
Protocall->Protocol

I had just finished processing the thought when I heard the two voices again:
Don't need a colon here. A period will do fine.

Maybe, if I had the drop on the two trainers, I’d be able to take them out.
I've noticed you use commas a lot. That's ok, I do too haha. Better than not using them at all. However, you should be on the lookout for places you don't actually need a comma. For example, you don't need a comma after "maybe" here.

He cawed, defiantly and began to flap his mighty metal wings.
A bit more egregious on this one. You don't need a comma between "cawed" and "defiantly" here.

I know you mentioned you're writing this fast and loose but I thought I'd point out some of these mistakes anyway. For me the ideal is my freewrites are as clean and high quality as my heavily revised work. I wish I could do a better job of explaining how to use commas, but I haven't been in an English classroom for a hot minute so I lack the vocabulary. However, I recently found out that Strunk and White's The Elements of Style is available as a free PDF. Worth checking out if you have any interest in a reference for grammar and whatnot. A bit old fashioned (they use a shit ton of commas too haha), but it's a classic when it comes to this stuff.

A fingerless gloved hand turned the handle of the door and I stepped outside.

Bit of a wording issue here. Saying "A" instead of "I" here typically implies it belongs to someone else. Even more nitpicky, but also probably add a hyphen between fingerless and gloved otherwise it could mean the hand was fingerless. I assume neither of these things were your intention and it's ultimately obvious from context, but little bits of confusing wording like this trip me up and take me out of the story.

Lucy stuck her head out and I scratched it, being rewarded with a satisfied growl from the eldritch dragon. Her two babies were asleep in the two holsters on either side of her head. Toil and Trouble spent almost all of their time sleeping, only waking up for feeding time or when their mother wanted to shoot them through the air.

Dragapult is such a funny concept, man. I thought this was really cute.

Next to him lay his trusty companion: Blastoise.

RIP my boi.

Jumping straight into the action like you've done in this chapter makes for an exciting beginning. Definitely gripping and intriguing. That said, forgoing the usual introduction where you would normally set up the world and establish the protagonist means you have to do that stuff elsewhere. My biggest advice going forward is to remember to find some time between the action to show us what this world is like and who Nico is.

You do a good job of this (or at least as much as could be expected from a single chapter), but you have to be careful. Because I don't know much about Nico, I have to fill in the gaps by making inferences from his narration. There's a lot of potential there, which is what's cool about first-person narrators. For example:

From what I had heard, he’d been a good leader, causing his sleepy hometown to flourish.

The use of "from what I had heard" kind of implies Nico hasn't lived in Pallet long (or at least isn't super involved in the community), since he's just heard these things instead of speaking from experience. If that's true and/or was your intention with this bit of narration then awesome. That's what first person is good at. If not, be aware that the gaps left by not having an established character yet makes me more susceptible to make potentially false assumptions based off of things like this.

You've definitely got the mystery aspect of a plot like this down. It's really driving everything forward well so far.

Hope this feedback was all helpful and made sense. I'm serious when I say this reminded me of the kind of thing I used to write, it's actually kind of uncanny haha. Keep it up!
 

yooloo33

Junior Trainer
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  1. tyranitar-mega
Hi there! This story caught my eye because it really reminds me of something I would have written when I was younger. Exciting start!

Typical format for fanfic on forums is double-spacing between paragraphs. Most forums can't handle indents, which is how it's typically done in real novels, so that's what we do to make stories less of an intimidating block of text.


gentile->gentle (I assume, but maybe you mean he's the only one who isn't Jewish haha)


Hariet->Harriet

Quick tip: I like to add names and Pokémon terms to the dictionary of my word processor of choice so that I don't get in the habit of ignoring the red underlines.


Protocall->Protocol


Don't need a colon here. A period will do fine.


I've noticed you use commas a lot. That's ok, I do too haha. Better than not using them at all. However, you should be on the lookout for places you don't actually need a comma. For example, you don't need a comma after "maybe" here.


A bit more egregious on this one. You don't need a comma between "cawed" and "defiantly" here.

I know you mentioned you're writing this fast and loose but I thought I'd point out some of these mistakes anyway. For me the ideal is my freewrites are as clean and high quality as my heavily revised work. I wish I could do a better job of explaining how to use commas, but I haven't been in an English classroom for a hot minute so I lack the vocabulary. However, I recently found out that Strunk and White's The Elements of Style is available as a free PDF. Worth checking out if you have any interest in a reference for grammar and whatnot. A bit old fashioned (they use a shit ton of commas too haha), but it's a classic when it comes to this stuff.



Bit of a wording issue here. Saying "A" instead of "I" here typically implies it belongs to someone else. Even more nitpicky, but also probably add a hyphen between fingerless and gloved otherwise it could mean the hand was fingerless. I assume neither of these things were your intention and it's ultimately obvious from context, but little bits of confusing wording like this trip me up and take me out of the story.



Dragapult is such a funny concept, man. I thought this was really cute.



RIP my boi.

Jumping straight into the action like you've done in this chapter makes for an exciting beginning. Definitely gripping and intriguing. That said, forgoing the usual introduction where you would normally set up the world and establish the protagonist means you have to do that stuff elsewhere. My biggest advice going forward is to remember to find some time between the action to show us what this world is like and who Nico is.

You do a good job of this (or at least as much as could be expected from a single chapter), but you have to be careful. Because I don't know much about Nico, I have to fill in the gaps by making inferences from his narration. There's a lot of potential there, which is what's cool about first-person narrators. For example:



The use of "from what I had heard" kind of implies Nico hasn't lived in Pallet long (or at least isn't super involved in the community), since he's just heard these things instead of speaking from experience. If that's true and/or was your intention with this bit of narration then awesome. That's what first person is good at. If not, be aware that the gaps left by not having an established character yet makes me more susceptible to make potentially false assumptions based off of things like this.

You've definitely got the mystery aspect of a plot like this down. It's really driving everything forward well so far.

Hope this feedback was all helpful and made sense. I'm serious when I say this reminded me of the kind of thing I used to write, it's actually kind of uncanny haha. Keep it up!
Hi! Thanks for the response, reading my story and the feedback! I really appriciate you taking the time to read my story and hopefully you enjoyed it!
The grammar and punctuation stuff is inevitible. I don't want to take an eternity editing each chapter and given the fact that I'm doing this all on my own with no beta readers or anything like that, some things are gonna fall through the cracks.

Bit of a wording issue here. Saying "A" instead of "I" here typically implies it belongs to someone else. Even more nitpicky, but also probably add a hyphen between fingerless and gloved otherwise it could mean the hand was fingerless. I assume neither of these things were your intention and it's ultimately obvious from context, but little bits of confusing wording like this trip me up and take me out of the story.
I was worried that I had too many "I" sentences in this description/gearing up scene so I decided to change it up a little bit.

Jumping straight into the action like you've done in this chapter makes for an exciting beginning. Definitely gripping and intriguing. That said, forgoing the usual introduction where you would normally set up the world and establish the protagonist means you have to do that stuff elsewhere. My biggest advice going forward is to remember to find some time between the action to show us what this world is like and who Nico is.
This story is from a bunch of different perspectives, each with a different level of action amongst them. I wanted to start in the midst of the action so to the reader, the invasion feels like it would to the characters; sudden, without warning, and destructive. With the plan I have for this, I hope that I can flesh out the world some more and make the whole world feel more organic and meaningful that way.

The use of "from what I had heard" kind of implies Nico hasn't lived in Pallet long (or at least isn't super involved in the community), since he's just heard these things instead of speaking from experience
He hasn't been in Pallet Town for very long. I kind of alluded to it throughout the chapter, but he works at an ordinary office job in Varidian city during the day but in reality he's an agent for the Baxcalibur program and that's why he's so skilled and unflinching when the attack actually happens.

If it's similar to something you've written, I hope that it'll be an enjoyible read! I'll do what I can to post as many chapters as I can in the coming months. If you have more feedback, let me know!
 
Chapter 2: Painkiller New

yooloo33

Junior Trainer
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  1. tyranitar-mega

Chapter 2: Painkiller​


Naturally, I was indisposed when the trainers seized Saffron.
With a grunt, I heaved the barbell off my chest one last time, and into the waiting hands of my buddy, Richard, the Machoke. Kicking my feet up, I sat upright on the bench as he racked the barbell. Ordinary people would be out doing normal Friday night things; drinking, partying, hanging out with friends, but not me. I was in the gym, and relishing the pump. Monday was leg day, Tuesday was chest, Wednesday was back, Thursday was shoulder day and Friday, we hit everything as hard as physically possible, before stumbling into the weekend. Two days off and then do it all over again.
I removed my earbuds from my ears and took in reality again. The gym was empty, except for myself, Richard, and Bruce, my Annihilape, who was currently repping out deadlifts to failure off to my right.
Richard offered me a hand and I accepted. He hauled me off the bench, and I swung my arms back and forth a few times to get blood running in them again. Bruce let the barbell fall, with an angry crackle and gave it a pissed off kick for good measure.
“Yo, Bruce! Cool it! That shit’s expensive,” I called over to him.
He sneered at his metal opponent and then made his way over to us.
“Let’s not kick the gym stuff. They’ve got cameras in here and shit.”
Annihilape was newly evolved and still trying to get his renewed wave of rage under control. After an evolution, it was really important to instill discipline into an Annihilape, so I’d seen to it that Bruce received extra difficult workouts these past few weeks.
I was just loading plates onto a barbell in the squat rack, when the lights flickered, and then went out.
An awkward moment passed as I waited for the lights to come on. They didn’t.
“What the hell?” I muttered, “Richard? Bruce?”
I heard the grunt and growl corresponding to my two buddies.
“What’s going on?” I stumbled out of the squat rack, trying to gather my bearings. Fortunately, I knew the layout of the gym like it was the back of my hand, and so I was able to figure out where I was relatively quickly. Bruce and Richard were behind me, as we made our way to the front of the room. The gym was open 24 hours but the staff left early on Fridays, so there wouldn’t be any receptionist at the front, but the exit was also close to the front desk.
A searingly bright light tore through the darkness. Momentarily blinded, I regained my sight to see an unnaturally white light emanating from the roof of a high rise outside the window. The gym had floor-to-ceiling windows in the cardio area which looked out at the Saffron City skyline, so you could take in the town while you ran on the treadmill. I rushed and saw white beam of light shooting from the top of the Silph Co building.
The gym I went to was an extension of the fighting dojo in northern Saffron. From here, above shorter buildings, loomed the enormous Silph Co headquarters. The massive high rise seemed to stretch on forever, and loomed intimidatingly over the rest of the city. Currently, something or someone was on the roof, sending a beacon of white light into the sky.
Seeing that made me realize that it wasn’t just the gym which didn’t have any lights on. From my vantage point, every single building had no power, not even backup or emergency lights. The absence of light was eerie in the enormous city.
Bruce and Richard joined me at the window, both taking in the sight.
“What do you suppose this is all about?” I asked.
Both of them shrugged.
The three of us headed out of the gym and out into the cold night. I shivered. Living close by meant that I usually didn’t bring a jacket to wear over my gray tank top, but this time I regretted it.
As I took in the city in front of me, I noticed something was off. The ordinarily bustling city was dead quiet. Nobody was moving along the sidewalks, no vehicles or pokemon traveled the roads and suspiciously of all, none of the buildings had any lights on. Not even the enormous advertisements plastered on the high rises or the street lights seemed to be working.
Having lived in Saffron for my entire life, the silence was positively eerie. What was going on? Being the only source of light, the beacon at the top of Silph Co cast long shadows across the dark streets, giving everything a ghoulish appearance.
Almost in a trance, I moved away from the gym and across the street, staring at the light atop the high rise. Richard and Bruce followed me, equally as concerned. As I moved, I realized how long I’d actually been in the gym today. I’d been almost done with that workout (only legs left to complete) when the blackout hit. Judging by how long it took me normally to complete such a workout, I wouldn’t have been surprised if I’d been dead to the world for a full hour and a half.
My house was only a block down the road, but for some reason, I found myself wandering towards the downtown, and Silph Co, like a Mothim to a candle. I still felt like I was in a daze. There was still nobody out and I felt alone in the big city. The beacon’s light was unwavering.
The sound of voices drew me back into lucidity. I didn’t know why but my first reaction was one of fear. Reacting quickly, I recalled Richard and Bruce and shoved the two pokeballs into the pocket of my shorts. I then raced for the doors of the nearest building, a large skyscraper bank, belonging to the Saffron Federal Reserve. When I reached the front, the revolving door was unmoving. I wasn’t able to get in. The voices were getting closer. I turned and ran towards a line of bushes and dove to the ground behind them. The wet grass was cold, but I was too scared to care right now.
“We seized Silph,” one voice said.
“Yup. It won’t be long until we get the shard too,” another replied.
“How do you figure?”
“She’s not going to simply let us take the biggest building in the city without at least an attempt at a counterattack. We’ve brought our patrol groups back to defend the building. Her and whoever is stupid enough to follow her will be in for a rude awakening when they try to hit us.”
The second voice chuckled. “They’re so fucking predictible. Fulton is a genius.”
Two trainers came into view from underneath the hedgerow. Each was ominously clad in a black bodysuit which obscured any defining features. Each suit had a hood over their head and a dark visor over their eyes, so it was impossible to even tell the eyecolor of the trainers.
I nervously squeezed my fists. Being built like I was didn’t lend itself to hiding very effectively. I just had to hope that the two people in front of me didn’t care enough to give the bushes a second glance.
Both trainers paused for a moment on the street, and my heart dropped. However, they hadn’t spotted me, and after a few seconds of hesitation, they moved on.
What the hell was that? This evening was getting more and more strange and I hated it. Judging from what I heard, this wasn’t some sort of trick. There was something genuinely ominous about the two anonymous trainers who had just passed by me.
I waited in stunned silence for a few more minutes, until I was certain that they were long gone. Then, I slowly rose. Looking left and right, I scrambled across the street, ducking into the cover of a small alleyway. Straight ahead of me was Silph Co.
I cautiously made my way through the alleyway. Rattata skittered away from my feet as I got close to them. I was about halfway down the alleyway when I saw a human shaped figure. I gripped the pokeball with Richard in my hand and cautiously approached it. When I was able to lay eyes on it, I had to suppress a cry of shock.
The figure was indeed a human, with a black two piece suit and a nametag which read Saffron Federal Reserve. His hands were clasped around a grisly wound, stabbed right through his sternum. There was no doubt that he was dead. His face bore a slackened look of pain, and his eyes were unmoving.
Had the patrolling trainers done this? I was no detective, but it was clear that this man had stumbled into the alley to die after being fatally stabbed.
I heard voices from an open apartment window upstairs.
“Mark! What are we going to do?” A female voice positively wailed.
“I don’t know,” a grim male voice responded, “we need to get the kids out of town.”
“How?” The woman replied, desperately, “those Arceus forsaken trainers are everywhere! They have the entire city surrounded!”
“We’ll find a way. I have Nidorino. If those bastards so much as come close to you and the kids…”
“What are you going to do? I saw one of them with a Druddigon literally rip the Staravia, of someone who tried to resist them, in half! You and Claus stand no chance.” The woman burst into tears.
“Jesus,” I whispered under my breath.
Part of me wanted to call it a night and just go home. Take my chances if one of those trainers decided to attack me. But then, the beacon atop Silph Co flickered and went out. A few moments later, it powered on again, but the light was flashing wildly.
As if propelled by some kind of external force, I began to run towards the enormous building.
The flickering light allowed for me to move with more freedom. I didn’t know if those trainers had night vision from their freaky ass visors, but somehow, I felt as though I had to get to Silph Co. It was as though there was someone whispering in my mind.
I need you. Please help me. I can’t hold out for much longer!
I huffed and puffed as I rounded the corner of a building. Cardio was far from my strong suit. However, right across the street was my destination. Without a moment’s pause, I crossed the road and threw open the doors to the enormous office complex.
Inside looked like a warzone. Desks and chairs had been turned sideways, as a means of cover, there were burn marks on the ground, water was spraying from a broken pipe in the fountain, plants were overturned, an enormous crack in the tile revealed only earth below it, and there were bodies. Oh the bodies.
I still hadn’t recovered from seeing the dead banker in the alley, but just from a glance, I saw about 30 or so dead, in all manner of violent and brutal ways. Pokemon also lay around the room. I wasn’t sure if they were dead or simply fainted, but it was clear that an enormous battle had taken place here. Was this the supposed counterattack that the two patrolling trainers were talking about? Of the bodies I saw, about five or six of them were dressed in a similar manner to the patrol I had hidden from. The rest wore civilian clothes, work formal wear or gym trainer outfits.
I took a cautious few steps into the room, moving past a woman in a loose fitting purple single piece robe, similar to a karate dogi. She’d been brutally frozen in place by some sort of ruthless ice move. Not lingering on it best I could, I made my way towards the elevator.
An explosion in the stairwell rocked the building. I released Bruce and stupidly moved towards the explosion.
Now, I wasn’t a pokemon battler in any capacity. I only qualified as a pokemon trainer because me and my buddies trained our muscles five days a week in the gym. Of course, it was natural for my pokemon to be able to fight, and I knew how to do it, but the girl behind me who had been frozen solid was very clearly more talented than I, most likely at least a gym trainer, and that hadn’t meant anything.
Another explosion shook the bottom floor and I heard the shouts of trainers and the cries of pokemon. The door to the stairwell was blasted open, and a woman was propelled out. She landed hard on her shoulder with a nasty crunch and cried out in pain. I winced. That sound was most likely her shoulder either dislocating or separating entirely. The woman rolled aside as a blast of electricity impacted the ground, where she had been a moment before, and recalled a pokemon who was still in the stairwell.
Breaking out of my shock, I raced towards the woman. I was about five steps away, when a huge, bipedal creature buzzed out of the stairwell. The enormous pokemon was red and white with two enormous, saw-shaped pincers. Before I could do anything, the creature clubbed the woman in the stomach with one of the terrifying arms. She screamed in pain and I felt a wash of agony rush through me.
I gritted and pointed at the beast.
“Close combat!”
Bruce charged forwards, hooting and growling angrily and swung at the beast. The creature dodged the punch but it was a decoy. Ahnililape brought his knee up and caught the creature right in the groin. It swung one of its pincers but Bruce ducked, and furiously began to pummel its steel carapace.
Out of the corner of my eye, I saw another figure emerge from the stairwell and without even looking, I hurled Richard towards them. I felt as though I was on autopilot.
“Vital throw!” I didn’t even perceive what kind of creature had emerged from the ground before Richard had hoisted it over his head and hurled it back into the stairwell.
Bruce screamed in pain and rage. I turned and saw the steel-plated creature punch him, just as it had hit the woman only moments ago.
“Help him!” I shouted to Richard.
I was standing over the woman when Richard leapt on the creature's back and began throwing hammer strikes to the back of its head.
The woman was slender, with long, straight black hair. She wore a purple cropped tank top and white pants with a black belt. The belt contained six sleek black and yellow ultra balls. With so many pokeballs it either meant she was a very talented trainer, or a bug catcher and I had never in my life seen a bug catcher with one ultra ball, much less six.
When she perceived me above her, her eyes snapped open. Her blue irises flashed pink and I felt as though I’d been electrocuted. It was as though every part of my brain had been given the worst possible headache at once.
“Holy shit, lady! I’m trying to fucking save you!” I managed to cry out.
As quickly as the pain had started, it stopped. The woman said nothing, but with one arm, she weakly tried to get to her feet.
Bending down, I reached my arms under her knees, and underneath the armpit of her good arm. I exhaled and prepared to hoist the woman upwards. Just like a snatch.
A cry of pain alerted me to the active melee which was currently ongoing. Bruce had been caught in one of the creatures' pincers. It squeezed down once, before hurling him across the room. Bruce hit the wall on the far side of the room and crumpled to the ground. The pokeball in my pocket opened and returned the fainted pokemon. Richard fought on valiantly, punching and chopping at the creature, but I knew it was only a matter of seconds before he too was overwhelmed.
“This is gonna hurt,” I warned the woman.
I exhaled sharply and heaved her upwards. Frankly, I had lifted much heavier weights in my time. The woman was skinny, and couldn’t have been more than 125 pounds.
She screamed in agony and I felt a portion of her pain cascade over me. I roared and pushed through the pain, rising upright, I threw the woman up over my shoulders, so I was holding her like the barbell during a back squat.
Summoning every bit of my strength, I charged straight across the reception area -- turned warzone. I leapt up and splashed through what remained of the fountain. As I reached the exit, I heard the pained cry of Richard. Without looking, I punched the button on my pokeball, returning Machoke.
Now I just had to outrun whatever steel plated abomination was behind me. I thrust my shoulder forwards, hurled open the door and took the steps downwards two at a time. The woman was surprisingly silent. She’d probably gone into shock between the battle and the doors.
I couldn’t hear the metal creature behind me, but I kept on running. I didn’t know where to, as long as it was not the Silph Co building. It felt like an eternity before I finally ran out of steam, but knowing my cardio was only a couple of minutes. Finally, I found a pokemart. The building had its sliding door ripped off its track, and inside was clearly looted, but it was enough for now.
I stumbled inside and as gently as I could, set the woman down on the nearest checkout counter belt.
I was breathing heavily, my lungs desperately trying to supply air to my cardiovascular system. I put my hands on my head to try and open up my lungs to allow more air into them.
I looked at the woman on the conveyor belt. She was much more messed up than I had first realized. Not only was her shoulder protruding at a bad angle and her midriff bleeding, but the back of her left leg had a nasty slash running down it, and the skin on her side was charred from some sort of burn.
Somewhere finding a second wind, I stumbled to the medicine aisle and grabbed as many medications relevant to her condition as I could. When I returned, she was conscious, but didn’t say anything as I opened a box of antiseptic wipes.
She winced as I cleaned her leg wound, but sighed in relief as I applied rawst berry juice to her burn.
“You’re pretty messed up,” I said, wincing as I realized that probably wasn’t the thing to say to someone who had been conscious for only a few moments.
To my surprise, she exhaled sharply, once, a weak laugh. “I’ll fucking say.” Her voice was raspy.
I unwound some gauze and tried my best to bind her wound. I was no doctor by any means, and part of me felt as though I was doing everything wrong, but I knew the human body, and so I knew how to fix it to an extent.
“What’s… what’s your name?” The woman weakly inquired.
“I’m Matt,” I replied, “what’s yours? What were you doing in the tower?”
“I could say the same for you,” she exhaled, “my name is Sabrina.”
I did a double take. “Wait. Not THAT Sabrina, right?”
She nodded, weakly, “the one and the same.”
I made a connection in my head. “They were waiting for you, right?”
Her expression grew dark, “that and then some. I did not expect them to have mustered such a force to Silph Co so quickly. We… We were ambushed in the lobby and all notions of ending this occupation quickly disappeared. They blew up the power grid and we were up the creek without a paddle.”
“That’s where I was alerted to all this. I was working out when they fired up the light on top of Silph.”
“I made it all the way to the top of the building and almost took out their beacon, but that’s when the man with the mega Scizor appeared.”
My eyes widened, “was that what the steel creature from hell was?”
“Yes. I was doing pretty good too… He appeared out of nowhere and took out my Hattereene. From there, it was full retreat.”
“Were there anybody else who made it out except for you?”
“I don’t know. I was separated from everyone.”
“What is all this? Why are they attacking us?” I pressed, “You must have some kind of inside scoop on this. You know, being a gym leader and all.”
She sighed, “do you know anything about the Paldea region?”
“Not really. They’re across the ocean from us, right?”
“Yes. In Paldea they have a phenomenon called terastalization which makes pokemon more powerful and alters their type temporarily, while in battle.”
“Okay?” I was confused.
“Well there is something similar here in Kanto. Not a matter of type changing, but empowering pokemon in another way. I don’t know how much you believe in legends, but it is said to provide power which is like terastalization but 100 times more powerful.”
“How so?”
“I don’t know. Many years ago, a group of trainers tried to consolidate this power and use it for evil. If it hadn’t been for the brave actions of a Viridian native known as Yellow, they would have succeeded.”
“But what are they after?”
Sabrina reached behind herself on the conveyor belt, wincing in pain. “They’re after this.”
In her hand was a small golden circle, with another golden circle in the middle.
“A gym badge? Don’t you give those out every time someone kicks your-” I cut myself off.
Sabrina closed her eyes. “Yes. Whenever someone kicks my ass, they get a marsh badge. However, those badges are simply replicas. This is the real mccoy.”
“Is it any different? What does it do?”
“For one thing, it kept me alive and is the reason why I’m still conscious.”
“Wait, it gives you powers?”
“Each badge is associated with a pokemon type. An affinity with that type means that the carrier of the badge can enhance themselves and their pokemon with it.”
“That’s why gym leaders specialize in a certain type!” I realized.
Sabrina sat up and clenched the badge in her hand. “Yes. and it allows us to do things like this-” her eyes flashed pink again and I heard a horrific popping and grinding noise. Sabrina’s shoulder wrenched itself back into place, seemingly all on its own. She hardly reacted.
My jaw must have hit the floor, “Holy shit…”
Sabrina smiled, wryly. Since I’d saved her, the psychic’s condition had dramatically and unnaturally improved. She hopped off the conveyor belt, which was still stained with the blood from her leg.
“What are we doing now? We need to hide or something.” I said.
Sabrina shook her head. “It’s true that most of my people are dead or have fled the city, but there are still a few living.”
“How do you know?”
“I can feel them.”
“Damn. Okay. What am I supposed to do about it?”
Sabrina began to walk towards the exit of the Pokemart, “why don’t you come and find out?”
 
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