Pokémon Pokémon Rebirth

[Axihdio]

Your guess for who the mysterious figure was close but it's another legendary. Hint: It's from Kanto.

 

[kingvoid]

Your guess for who the mysterious figure was close but it's another legendary. Hint: It's from Kanto.

woah i knew its Mewtwo

 

[Axihdio]

Wait till you read the second chapter.

 

[K_S]

Chapter 3

Hi, heres your tangoversion catnip, enjoy.

Chapter 3 - Sorre Strikes

Pronounced sore or sorry?

30 minutes after the crash



Joseph : Daisuke! Get up! Daisuke!

Candisly this is the weordest case of wake up chrono i've seen in fiction in a long time... i wonder why joseph waited so long to wake dai?

Daisuke : Uhh... What happened, sir? Are we all okay?



Joseph : Don't worry. We're in the chopper. Or at least what remains of it.



Daisuke glances at the damaged chopper. The rest of the crew is seen resting in the chopper.

With it being a crash i'm surprised theres enough of a chopter to rest in. I'm also wondering how Dia didn't notice the remains (non smoking i guess) of the whirly bird almost as soon as he woke up since... well even a one person one is large and the militaty ones that were running pick up ect couldn't of been tiny.

Daisuke : Is anyone hurt ?



The rest: No.

The rest? His classmates, the piolets? This also cpuld be a point to show where everyone is and what theyre dping by doing a soundoff if you wanted to...

Joseph : Well, by some miracle all of us came out unscathed. However, we are stranded in the middle of a desert now and we don't know which region we are in right now.

You'll notice that there are 2x nows right next to eachnother? Because this is a dialogue heavy fic you might want to revisit it to change that up a bit. Otherwise it makes the talker sound repetative, and theres no scenery, or action, to distract from the flaw. It pops more for being so isolated.

Daisuke : It's obviously not Kanto and Johto because they don't have deserts. There isn't a sandstorm right now so we're probably not in Hoenn becaue the desert there has a permanent sandstorm. So right now the only logical answer is Orre.

Well someone passed basic geography... because this is pretty au i'm surprised the maps werent tweeked more...

Joseph: Well I think that you're correct because I can't see anything other than sand.

Maxie might take that as praise. Somewhere in hoenn he's thrilled and doesnt know wht...

Daisuke: Well, in that case we need to scavenge whatever we can find from the wreckage and get to civilasation as quickly as possible.

Also... water. And arwnt these kids? Shouldnt they be freaking out about mom dad sibs being stranded ect?

Mewtwo: Before that I want to get something out of the way.



Jean : What is it?



Mewtwo : I didn't get the chace to properly introduce myself just now so I'm going to be introducing myself. My name is Kakuro Noshiteru. I moved to Kanto from Johto last week. That's why I was walking around when Daisuke and Jean spotted me.

i mean ko' could of been hitting the mom and pop mart for milk... but moving between regions works. Though why he's divulging this amount of detail in everyones hearing shot is confusing.

Abdul: Oh, so that's why you were walking there! (This kid's alibi makes no sense! I'm pretty sure that the soldiers were also terrorising the areas near the school.)

Why is the later half of abdul's dialogue in patenthases?

Jean: Anyways, let's start scavenging for anything of use.

Like water? I'm surprised no ones commented on the heat. Orre was a dust bowl and all that...

The group searches for around 10 minutes and find nothing of use.

Also consoderong the piolets are military persons i'm surprised they aren't stepping up to lead more...

Daisuke : Damn it! There's nothing but scrap metal! There's not even any guns that we could use in case things go south.

but realistically, how many of them know how to shoot? And those that do how many have superpowers instead?

Jean : Fantastique! We are stuck in the middle of a desert and we have nothing to defend ourselves with!



Kakuro : Well we have our abi-



Jean(whispering) : I don't think we should tell our teachers. They might freak out.



Kakuro(whispering) : I guess you're right.

Kakuro basically screamed "I'm mewtwo" and there were lightsjows earlier. Jow oblivious are these tag along cast members again?

Daisuke(whispering) : Agreed. Who knows how Mr. Joseph and Mr. Abdul would react.



In the distance



??? : So those bastards survived the crash? Quite impressive for two old ass bums and three idiots. They'll be wishing that they died in the crash though.

So are we tagging along with silver- i mean ??? Now?

After the failed scavenging, the group proceeds to go north in an attempt to reach the closest town.

Um no it looks like we are revisitong the scaveng8ng again and then going north... its a shame we dont get a reason as to why they picked north...

Jean : Oh, merde. I feel like an ice cream on a hot summer day. Do any of you guys feel the same?



Daisuke : Well, yeah. However it was this or going at night when we could get ambushed by who knows how many wild pokémon when we're at our most tired and vulnerable.

But heat stroke and dehydration! And how are the mundane kids/teachers coping suoer squad? Inquiring minds and all that...

Jean : Well, I would rather get a very terrible sunburn than get eaten alive by several or more wild poke'mon.



Kakuro : I agree with Daisuke. However, the heat is killing me right now.

And everyone else. Did anypne pack sunscreen?

Joseph : Well, can't blame you. Johto's weather is a lot cooler than Kanto and this region.



Abdul : Anyways, I think I see some buildings nearby on that canyon. So, we must be close to civilisation.

O hope its not a heat mirrage. Those are the worst...

Joseph : Well then, let's keep going forward.



As the group was marching forwards towards the buildings, both Daisuke and Kakuro sensed a foreign psychic signature in their vicinity.



Kakuro : Mr. Joseph I think that somebody might be watching us.



Joseph : What makes you think that Kakuro?



Kakuro : Well, I had a gut feeling that something was off.



Abdul : Come to think about it, we haven't discussed the possibility of some of those soldiers tailing us here.



Just as Abdul finished his sentence, a rocket came flying at the group.



Daisuke : Everyone run rocket inbound!!!



The group manages to dodge the rocket in time.

Highschoolers... dodged a military rocket? Ala smash bros twinkle toe style dodgong? Or did they all scatter and it hit where they were? Or was it a really bad shot?

Jean : What the hell kind of maniac shoots rockets at random people?!



Just as Jean finished talking, a purple metallic looking arm emerged from the sand and grabbed his right leg.



Jean : MON DIEU!! GET THIS THING OFF ME!!!



Kakuro : AMETHYST WAVE!!



Kakuro launches several purple crystals at the arm which exploded upon contact with said arm.

So muxh for that whole secret identity stuff i guess?

Joseph : Everyone! We need to get to the town as quickly as possible before this maniac kills us!

What maniac? The purple monster or mr. Rocket launcher?

The group starts running towards the canyon at full speed. However, bigger arms appear in the way creating a blockade that blocks them from the canyon.



Joseph : Oh shit! Everyone dodge the arms!



The arms begin swinging around trying to hit the group. In the distance, the mysterious man was watching the group dodge his arms with relative ease.



???: (This isn't good! My arms aren't precise or fast enough to nail them! I guess I have to handle them myself.)



He then proceeds to activate his jetpack and flies towards the group, intending to finish them off with a barrage of rockets from his jetpack.

He's going to shoot his own hands? Isnt that going to hurt?

???: This'll do!



Kakuro : There's that guy! He's shooting more rockets at us!

How did they see mr. Flyguy anyway?

The group manages to dodge the rockets which proceed to destroy the arms instead.



Daisuke: You piece of shit! Take this!



Daisuke throws several electric tanto towards the assailant. He manages to dodge most of them but he is hit by two of them.

A) whats a tanto

B) isn't rocket man like super duper high up/in the distance? How is Dai making the shots?

??? : Arghhh! That shit hurt! You'll regret ever crossing Sorre you pole looking piece of shit!

Laughs. Pole looking? You mean Dia is a string bean build? Laughs. I'm sorry but i'm not able to take either mr. Rocket or stick boy too seriously right now...

Sorre summons more arms to hopefully crush the group. Unfortunately, all of the arms miss due to their piss poor accuracy and speed.



Sorre : (Screw those shitty arms! I'll just finish them off with my guns!)

Paranthasis what do they mean again?

Sorre then pulls out two submachine guns and starts firing at both Daisuke and Kakuro.

Submachine guns? Sigh. I'll hit up google i guess...

Daisuke : Kakuro! He's targeting us! We need to finish him quickly!

Us? Dai is making a bit of a stretch here...

Kakuro : Got that Daisuke! Let's finish him with style!



Daisuke and Kakuro begin by shooting at Sorre with the electric Tanto and Amethyst Wave, which he dodges easily.

Whats electric tango look loke again? How do they look melded together?

Sorre : L L L L L you missed losers!

Lll?

Daisuke and Kakuro: Oh really?



Daisuke and Kakuro proceed to use telekinesis to guide the Tanto and Amethyst Wave to Sorre's jetpack. The Jetpack then explodes after contact with both types of projectiles causing Sorre to be blasted into he sky. Daisuke and Kakuro then pose dramatically to end the combo.

They blasted off mr. Rockwt? I suspect jessie and james will mosey out w alawsuit at this rate.

Daisuke : Man, that was a blast wasn't it? No pun intended.



Kakuro : Haha, yes it was.



Their conversation is suddenly interrupted when a giant worm pokémon devoured Sorre who was falling from the air. The giant worm pokémon then proceeds to return underground never to be seen again.

Guess whonis not returning. So was it a stealix... or?

Kakuro : ......Well that just happened.



Daisuke : Yare Yare. Let's just get to the damn town already.

Yareyare? Whats that mean?

End of Chapter 3



Biography : Kakuro Noshiteru



A product of the Mewtwo's from the Mewtwo Project made by Team Rocket in the year 1996, his parents and all the other "First Generation Mewtwo" were cloned from the DNA from the eyelashes of various Mew's gathered across 5 years, Team Rocket aimed to use the Mewtwo to conquer the entirety of the world of Pokémon. However, blinded by their hubris they did not consider making contingency plans to prevent a Mewtwo uprising which led to their downfall. The Mewtwos then spread across the entire world to live in secrecy. Abilities : Psychic abilities(Similar to Daisuke e.g mind reading, telekinesis and more.), Explosive psionic constructs- Kakuro can create constructs out of psionic energy (wires, blocks and rods) that can be set to timed detonation , contact detonation or manual detonation. Likes : Cherries, reading, females h---- and sunbathing Favourite foods : Any kind of fish dish and ice cream with cherries. Dislikes : His brother teasing him , people annoying him when he tries to read and people who exploit others for their own gain. Height 5 ft 7 ½ inches(171.45 cm)

Well that ot. Here you go.

 

[Axihdio]

Thanks for the review K_S!

 

[Tango]

Chapter 7 - The Meaning of Being Lonely

Hey Axi, I'm back for my next review for you.

Judging on the chapter title, this one seems like it may be quite different in tone compared to the previous chapters. I'm curious how it will go!

Spoiler: Line By Line

Pallet Town - Serizawa Family residence - 3 hours and 45 minutes after the attack on Cyan Academy

Ah, so we are getting both a flashback AND pov swap! Neat!

While Daisuke and the rest of the group were in Orre, Daisuke's family had filed a missing persons report on Daisuke after failing to get any leads on his whereabouts.

Wow. Apparently they caught on FAST to the fact that he was missing!

Did police even finish sorting out the aftermath of the attack? Did they do a role call to see who was missing? Did they identify the bodies of the people killed so that they know Daisuki wasn't killed in the attack? Evidently they have the most efficient police imaginable. Kudos to officer Jenny on that one! 🫡

In the police station

Officer Miki : Hello professor. What brings you here today?

Officer Miki. I stand corrected.

Oh, nothing much officer. Just a brutal school shooting violent enough to make world headlines that my son may have been involved in... I'm sure I'm the very first person to mention this and that you, as a police officer, had no clue what happened earlier today with it. But it's not like it was important or anything. Just the usual!

Julie : It's... about my son, Daisuke.

Officer Miki : What happened to him?

Julie : He... he went missing after I dropped him off at school today.

Officer Miki : Which school does he attend?

Julie : He goes to Cyan Academy in Viridian.

Officer Miki : Alright I'm going to call up the guys in Viridian to inform them about his disappearance.

Officer Miki goes to another room to call the Viridian police station.

5 minutes later

Officer Miki : Alright, the guys in Viridian said that they found Daisuke's bag and water bottle along with his friend's bag near the assembly point. They concluded that Daisuke and his friend might have ditched their bags in order to quickly escape from the school. Witnesses also said they saw someone summon a Scyther that proceeded to chase several students that were running towards the school entrance . Unfortunately, those students didn't make it.

Uh... Officer, there was WAY more going on than THAT! 😅

I'm honestly starting to wonder if the police are corrupt and in league with the villains. Why else would they try to cover this up so much?

Julie(slightly unnerved and emotional) : Did Daisuke and his friend make it?

Officer Miki : Well, we didn't find samples of their blood at the crime scene nor their bodies. So they are most likely still alive.

They even ran blood tests with results already analyzed. I suspect they are lying about the blood test and they know Daisuki is still alive because they are in communication with the villains.

Kosuke who was at Julie's left spoke up.

Kosuke : Excuse me officer but do you know where Daisuke could be right now?

Officer Miki's moved her head towards Kosuke at a surprisingly fast speed, causing him to become frightened.

Kosuke : Whoa whoa whoa, I just asked where my little bro is ! No need to death stare me!

Officer Miki : Sorry! It's just something I do sometimes!

I'm sorry, what? 🤣

Anyway, we couldn't find where he went after that. But some witnesses said that they saw a military chopper leaving the school.

Yeah, these things happen sometimes. Military craft around a school shooting. Just another Monday. Nothing weird about that!

They also said that it crashed into a Salamance at crazy speeds and then flew away. Because Daisuke and his friend weren't anywhere to be found at or nearby the school, they might have boarded said chopper in order to escape from the attack. Two of his teachers also went missing along with a passerby who we also think boarded the same craft.

Maybe. Either that or they skipped school or ran away on foot. You know. Like normal people. But no. A military chopper was clearly the ONLY POSSIBLE solution!

Julie : So there is a chance that Daisuke is safe?

Officer Miki : There is, but we just have to keep searching and hope that he is safe.

Julie : Okay, we will be taking our leave now.

No follow up questions? Like what was a military craft doing there or any questions about the attack? She has some SERIOUS confidence in Daisuki.

1 day later with Daisuke

It was around 1:30 a.m. The rest of the group was sound asleep except for Daisuke. He was trying his hardest to sleep but he just couldn't after everything that happened. The school being attacked, them being hunted down, Abdul dying. Those events were still fresh in his mind, not to mention how his family is dealing with him not being around. Especially his mother. It was almost too much to bear.

You mean his mother that barely asked any questions, seemingly shrugged, and just went back home? 😅

BUT. It does make sense that Daisuki would be shaken by these events. I doubt he ever went through something like this before. I'm surprised he didn't add fear for his own life ok that list unless he considers himself to be invincible.

Daisuke :(Damn it! Why can't I forget these for just a little bit so I can get some sleep?! It's driving me nuts! Everything!)

15 minutes later, Daisuke was able to fall asleep. However, his predicament wasn't over yet.

Daisuke woke up in a white, colourless void.

Well THAT isn't how dreams usually go!

Daisuke : Huh? Where am I?

Daisuke then answered his own question

Daisuke : I must be in a dream. Can't even get some rest in my dreams.

Dang! Daisuki can also effortlessly and immediately tell when he is dreaming?!

Daisuke proceeded to wander the white colourless void until he saw some buildings.

Daisuke : Wait a minute, isn't that my house ?

Daisuke proceeded to enter his "house".

Daisuke : (What the hell happened here?)

Daisuke looked around the "house". The furniture was comprised of a mish-mash of parts from other things like cars, motorcycles and even pokéballs. There were many different kinds of pokémon there but they didn't seem to notice him at all. The hallway itself was warping like some kind of alternate dimension from Ultraman.

Ok, yeah! Pretty cool dream so far.

Daisuke : Uhhh... What is going on?(I really need to see Mrs. Anne again after all of this is over.)

Who's that? A therapist? If so, I don't remember hearing how he had one. Makes me wonder what he would talk to one about prior to the attack...

Just then, Daisuke spotted a familiar woman across the hallway.

Daisuke : Mama?!

The woman responded back

Julie : Daisuke?!

Daisuke ran towards his mother and embraced her with tears flowing from his face.

Daisuke : Mama!! I missed you so much! I'm sorry if I ever pissed you off or ruined a day for you!

I would say he hasn't been away from her very long, but considering how much he has been through since the attack, this feels legit.

Julie : Oh, my son! You don't need to apologise! Where are you? Are you okay?

Daisuke : Oh, I'm at-

Daisuke pulled himself and his mother away from a Pin Missile that was aimed at the both of them.

Daisuke : Ma! We have to run!

Daisuke used telekinesis to destroy the wall behind them and used his elemental ability of electricity to run away with his mother.

Julie : Daisuke! What is happening?!

Daisuke : I don't know?! They didn't even notice me when I came in!

Julie and Daisuke run as far as they can, however they seem to not go as fast as they are supposed to.

Hmm! I suspect this dream is part dream and part psychic connection to his mother. Perhaps they are both dreaming at the same time and this is a shared dream? Fascinating.

Julie : Daisuke! We need to go faster!

Daisuke : This is the fastest I can go!

Julie : Daisuke! The ground underneath us is moving backwards!

Daisuke :!!

Daisuke looks towards the ground, realising what his mother said was true as they started to slow down even further.

Hmm! Seems like a psychic presence is after them?

Daisuke :(Shimata! It's no use running away! The more time I spend running away, the faster the ground moves backwards! It's like running on a treadmill that keeps going faster and faster!)

Daisuke starts coming up with a plan to escape this perilous situation.

Daisuke :(Okay, if I keep running this way, the ground will move too fast in the opposite direction and we will be blown backwards towards the approaching pokémon. If I try running diagonally forward, the same thing might happen. So the only thing that I can do is this very risky maneuver. )

Julie : Daisuke are you sure about this?

How does Julie know what he is planning? 🧐

Daisuke : If it means we get out of here alive? Yes.

Daisuke stops running. Using his earth and telekinetic abilities in tandem to create an explosion in the ground that launches him and his mother into the sky. He also used parts of the ground as shields from the pokémon's attacks. After landing, Daisuke realised that running away was practically useless because the ground would just move in the opposite direction again. He then pitched a crazy idea to his mother.

Daisuke : Ma, I think that we should stop running and start fighting.

Well. Yeah. I mean... that's pretty much the only option since hiding is out of the question! (unless he can figure out how to wake up.)

Julie : Daisuke, you might be right. When we tried to run away just now, the ground started moving backwards to keep us in place. It seems that the only thing we can do is fight!

Oook... so by this point, you have reminded the reader no less than five times that the ground is moving backwards... I think we get it! 😅 (Trimming away some of those reminders might be better. At the rate it's going it's worse than the Pot of Greed reminders in the Yu-Gi-Oh anime! Every time they play it they HAVE to remind the audience that it draws 2 cards! )

Daisuke : So be it.

Daisuke ran towards the pokémon that were chasing them started using every ability his disposal to fight the pokémon. His mother also joined suit. The both of them started using their abilities to do battle with the pokémon that were chasing them.

WELL! Ok then! I had no idea his mother had powers too! (I'm assuming it's NOT just for the dream!)

Among those pokémon were Gurdurr, Graveler, Bisharp, Vigoroth and many more. Daisuke started by impaling most of the pokémon with spikes from the earth, followed by his mother who telekinetically moved the spikes towards more pokémon causing them to be impaled as well. Daisuke then summoned a small tornado to trap the pokémon and proceeded to throw his electric Tanto towards them which caused them to faint. Daisuke and his mother then proceeded to launch a combo attack.

I see they must team up regularly to battle things! Did Daisuke's mother teach him how to use his powers?

Daisuke : Ma, put all your energy into this!

Julie : Got it!

Daisuke summons multiple earth spikes, conjures multiple electric Tanto and wind disks while his mother charges a psionic blast in her hands.

Daisuke : NOW!

Daisuke and his mother fire their combined attack at the pokémon, causing them to disintegrate.

Disintegration. When making mon faint, just isn't enough!

Daisuke's mother then collapsed to the ground.

Julie : Pant.... pant.... Daisuke, you know your mother isn't built for stuff like this anymore right?

Daisuke : Hehe.. Sorry, ma.

But...! It's a dream! (...Isn't it??) Why is she getting tired in a dream!

Suddenly, the space around them started to distort.

Daisuke : Oh, shimata! The space around us is collapsing!

Julie : Grab onto my hand, Daisuke!

Just as Daisuke was going to grab his mother's hand, the space around them collapsed and Daisuke was jolted awake.

I mean... they could have just done that PRIOR to going through the effort to impale and disintegrate the attacking mon, but I suppose it wouldn't have been nearly as cool.

Daisuke : Pant.. pant... Oh shit!

Daisuke started searching for his mother in a panic.

Daisuke : Where are you where are you where are you where are y-

Kakuro : Daisuke, calm down!

Daisuke : Kakuro! Have you seen a woman with long black hair who is also wearing glasses around here?!

Kakuro : Daisuke!!

Daisuke was startled by Kakuro raising his voice.

Kakuro : Are you alright, Daisuke? We woke up to you screaming about your mother and then you took Jaiden and ran somewhere. We were really worried about you!

Mathaflippin SLEEP WALKING?

Daisuke : Wait, I took Jai-

Daisuke glanced towards his left. He saw a confused and slightly scared Jaiden.

Daisuke : Uhh... Sorry?

Dang, Daisuke. You took Jaiden by the hand and weren't even conscious for it. Mega fail, dude. 😅

Kakuro : Daisuke, if you're having a hard time coping with everything that has happened recently, we're here for you.

Daisuke : Thanks, Kakuro.

Kakuro : Now, lets all get back to our campsite, Mr. Joseph and Jean are waiting for us.

So... we are just going to gloss over how Jaiden was pulled along? I feel like she deserved a little more of a reaction...

Also, I wonder how he held her hand? Did she see him thrashing in his sleep in distress and wanted to help so she was the one to reach out and hold his hand before he started sleep walking and pulling her along?

End of Chapter 7

Biography : Professor Julie Cassia

Age : 43 turning 44

Daisuke's mother. She loves and cares for him very much. She is also the pokémon professor of the Kanto region. It is a position that she has held for 20 years. She also loves her two other children Kosuke and Jennie but she is a bit biased to Daisuke due to them having similar interests. She specialises in genetics and caring for pokémon.

Well... when she isn't busy impaling and disintegrating them, anyway.

Neat to get a bio for her, though!

Likes : Backstreet Boys, coffee, spending time with her children and making new discoveries about pokémon.

Dislikes : Rude trainers , trainers that say weird stuff , trainers who don't care about their pokémon and the Pokémon League's incompetence.

Height : 5 ft 5 in(165.1 cm)

Closing Thoughts:
With my most recent chapter review of yours being Rebirth 2, I think it's clear to see how much your writing has improved! Probably a good sign to go back to edit and polish Rebirth 1. After all, every reader of Rebirth 2 will likely read through Rebirth 1 on the way there. The first book is pretty important for that reason.

I'd say this chapter could use some work(the book in general does, but I do think Rebirth 1 chapters are getting more polished as they go!).

This chapter had a number of interesting elements to it. Very curious what was happening in that dream too.

Also, the battle with his mother was fairly smooth and easy to tell what was happening. The anime-style of combo attacks is not lost on me. I can see what you were doing there and I could imagine the action pretty well in my mind.

As for the title, I'd say it fits. He was missing his mother and met her in a presumably shared dream while holding Jaiden's hand.

But another thing I want to mention again is that despite any polish or reworks it might benefit from, your fic series continues to keep things lively and avoid being boring. Even sections that might be considered 'boring' move fairly quickly, so it's really not a problem. Anyway, I hope some of this was helpful and I'll see you again next time!

 

[Axihdio]

Thanks Tango! I remember how fast I was going through writing Rebirth 1 back in late 2025. I was certainly pumping out chapters a lot faster than I am now. I guess the silver lining in my slower writing rate is that my chapters are way more polished now compared to Rebirth 1 (Especially some of its earlier chapters). Have a nice day!