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Pokémon Fledglings

Tango

Mascot of the Doduo Alliance
Location
beyond the Nexus
Pronouns
He/him
Partners
  1. doduo
  2. doduo-shiny
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So... @Spiteful Murkrow I've got to get reviews from somewhere for the mini-blitz so I figured why not come back for another review in our exchange ahead of schedule? I hope you and @Virgil134 enjoy! :veelove:

So, the first image was an egg and I forgot to comment on how it is now a sailboat. Clearly this is building up to them sailing on a ship, but to where and for what? Does this mean little Nida will be leaving home and will soon be apart from her family? :eyes: I imagine she will find it a relief at first from not having to babysit anymore, but I suspect she is the type to get homesick. When they leave on this ship, who will go with her? Will Crom be there? If not, then it means she will be without Crom. I assume Pleo would go with her at least, right?

Anyway, as for the chapter title, it's difficult to determine how this will go, but I assume there will be some kind of test that some will fail but Nida will succeed in. :eyes:

Morning arrived in all it's shimmering splendor came... The sun beamed down, bathing the land in a golden warmth. was out, The sky, a deep cerulean kindness befitting of the cradle in which we lived. was blue, and The grass limped with the lingering kiss of dew the night had bestowed upon it. the and the mat outside were damp from the dew of the night.
📝Hmm. How about these?

I guess I was feeling a bit poetic! :mewlulz:

As the sun's rays poked through the treetops on the sparsely-wooded hillside where Marley and Teja's burrow was, Nida found herself emerging from her parents' burrow and stretching after a rather unrefreshing sleep.

 She saw the neighbor Pokémon doing similar stretches before they went off to their day's errands, following a raucous night that had seemed like it had come from some strange dream.
This bit sounded a bit nicer! :eyes:

Except that dream was grounded in a Legendary reality, which Nida's ears could hear stumbling its way up the burrow's passage.

"Pleo… Are you making it out alright?" she yawned. Her question was quickly answered by a head popping out from the burrow, although the rest of the Lugia attached to it remained out of sight.


"I'm stuck!" Pleo cried, fidgeting and trying to find a way out the mouth of the burrow. The Nidoran gave a quick peek under the Lugia's neck and quickly delivered a prognosis.



"Uh… Pleo."



"Yeah?"



"Remember how you needed to crouch to get in last night?" Nida asked, flattening her ears.



"Eh-? Oh! Right!"
My goodness. Pleo has so much to learn! Very interesting concept for a character. Really learning everything from scratch! The readers presumably get to watch Pleo learn, grow, and acheive the expectations the island originally had for him. Should be quite the journey! :quag:



The base of Pleo's neck dropped a little, as the rest of his body squeezed out of the burrow, crouched low to the ground. Once he had finally crested the entrance and made his way onto the mat, Pleo vigorously beat his wings to shake off some dirt and cramps from his rest overnight.



"Your house is too small!" Pleo said, his voice coming out as somewhere in between a childish protest and a sleepy yawn.



"I'll try and have you stay with Crom or at the Guild Hall from now on," Nida sighed. "But was the rest of your stay fun? Er… aside from the... poisoning, of course…?"



"Uh-huh!" Pleo nodded.



Nida opened her mouth to press further, only to stop and realize… Pleo was probably barely a day old. If he hadn't enjoyed the night, would it even occur to him to try and fib to her? The Nidoran shook her pelt and then turned for the path, that Dojo wasn't going to come to them all the way up on that hillside.
Yeah, Pleo is certainly a newborn with extremely limited experiences. Good call on her part regarding his likeliness to lie. He is a pure and innocent birb.

"Great, now let's get going."



The two set out towards the creek that Nida normally crossed to reach the Guild Hall. They passed neighbors who offered up reverent greetings, as well as a few young Pokémon in a group who momentarily stopped a short game with a pebble they were kicking about to wave to the passing Lugia.

Before long, the trees grew thinner and the clutter of Bluewhorl Town's huts and tents began to spring up, though the reactions by the varying locals had not changed much from the ones up on the hillside where the burrow was. The two eventually found themselves nearing a hut along a path that smelled strongly of baked flour.



"Ooh! Something smells good!" exclaimed Pleo.
I bet it's Crom's! :eyes:

"That's the bakery that Crom's family runs. They're probably making bread inside," Nida answered.
Crom is always a welcome addition. :veelove:

"But… Where's Cro-?"



"Hey!" a voice interrupted.



Nida and Pleo turned to find themselves face-to-face with Crom, darting out from the entrance to his family's bakery. This time, two other Druddigon tailed him, sporting a pair of golden scarves with umber designs resembling sheafs of grain on them. One of the two Druddigon that followed was slightly smaller than Crom, and the other was much, much larger.



"Mom made us fresh bread today!" Crom cheered, giving his wings a playful beat before the elder Druddigon began to speak.



"Hmm hmm, I felt that it was the least I could do. After all, a Protector surely needs to eat well in order to defend other Pokémon!" the larger Druddigon answered with a proud smile.


Ok, I instantly like Crom's mom. Nida would have a nice mother-in-law later when she gets with Crom! 🥰

She passed over a small satchel that contained fresh and warm loaves that had been shaped to look roughly like Lugia- or more accurately, the rough paintings of Lugia that were up at the shrine.



“Ooh… They look pretty," Pleo said as he gawked at the golden-brown loaves.



"And it smells great too, Gwenith," Nida chimed in as she snuck a whiff of little bird-shaped pieces of bread.

Gwenith? Sure! That works. What a unique name too! :eyes:

"All the better to help you today! I had heard from Mosca that she wants the Protector to try out scouting practice," Gwenith replied. "Why, with loaves like these to sniff out, you'll get through those mazes in no time!"



"That said, aren't you all running a little late right now?" she asked, drawing some awkward looks from Nida and Pleo.



"Uh…"



"Er…"



"Right," Crom said, shaking his head a bit. "See you later, mom!" he called off as the three Pokémon turned and briskly made their way along the path to the Dojo, Gwenith waving after them.



"Mooom, why does Crom get to hang around the sea god?" the smaller Druddigon protested as the three left.


You really handle kids well in the fic! I can usually imagine their voices and inflections vividly as I read. :veelove:

EDIT: I came back here after getting to the chapter end.
Gwenith: "Oh, don't worry Cenn, I'm going to go hang around the sea god too, so it won't just be Crom!"
Cenn: What?! But now it's even LESS fair!
Gwenith: It's more fair for me.
Cenn: Can I at least have some bread?
Gwenith: Sorry. Gave it all to Crom.
Cenn: (That's the last straw. From here on out, I will become the greatest villiain the world has ever seen! I'll gather the marked under my banner and finish what they started so many years ago! And once I am the supreme ruler of this world? I'll have Pleo PLAY with me!)

"Now, now, Cenn, he's not doing this for just fun and games. He's helping the Protector grow big and strong, just like you and Crom will be one day," Gwenith admonished, her voice fading into the din of life in town as the Nida, Crom, and Pleo went further down the path.
I wonder just how far into the future this fic will go? Will Cenn be someone who can fight beside them someday? So many possibilities... :eyes:

As the three followed the path, they found themselves travelling
📝traveling

alongside the creek that flowed through town. The buildings and tents grew more closely-spaced, the gawking and greetings from bystanders more common. All the while, Pleo struggled with a question incessantly gnawing at his mind..
📝missing a dot

This bit is pretty neat, though. I see it unfold in my mind as a mini montage as the three walk with the same expressions and faces as the scene around them changes almost as if walking on a treadmill.

"Hey, Nida? What is 'training'?"



"Training is when you practice fighting, to get tougher!" Crom responded, swiping his claws at the air playfully.



"... But Nida said that 'enemies' fight in her bedtime story last night. Will we be fighting with enemies there?" Pleo asked, tilting his head a bit.



"Uhm… No. They're just some other Pokémon from around town who want to get tough too," Crom answered.



"... So 'friends' also fight?"



"What? No!" Crom explained, concerned about what idea the young Lugia seemed to be putting into his head. "Training's fun!"


Oh dear... I don't think Pleo is going to like training. 😬

He didn't like getting poisoned and I don't think pain is going to go very well with him... :sadbees:

But, wow what a weird concept that would be! Pokemon, in general, are pretty much always ready to battle, it feels like. Seeing one who might initially shy away from it for the Pokemon fandom would be a pretty unique perspective as far as I'm concerned! :eyes:

"Maybe we should let Maestra Mosca explain the rest of this, Crom," Nida sighed. After all, if he could get such wild ideas from a simple bedtime story… Maybe it would be better to try and let some older Pokémon explain things to Pleo instead.
Perhaps, but I wonder how many newborns 'Maestra' really has experience with instructing? :eyes:



"Is 'training' also a story? It seems confusing like a story-"



"Oi!" a Swellow's voice interrupted. The group of three turned to see their team's leader perching on a crude wooden fence in front of a hut with large side wings and a tiled roof. Thankfully Kiran had arrived bright and early, otherwise they would have walked right on past the Dojo!


Nice to see you utilize Kiran's features. Perching on a fence is a fine example of using the differences of the various mon to add variety and nuance. :okgon:

"Oh, good morning, Kiran!" Pleo chirped energetically.



"Are you ready for your training today, Pleo? I've even got a scarf and a badge just for you!" Kiran said, gesturing with a wing to a navy blue scarf with a white star on it- and a glinting badge that he had taken the liberty of affixing for his newest recruit.



"So we're going to be fighting for fun today?" Pleo cheerily asked.


They are going to have to be careful how they teach Pleo. He is both highly intelligent and highly ignorant. 😅

"Uh," Kiran groaned as he looked at his other teammates, getting just a little nervous about where Pleo might have gotten that idea.



"Crom said that training is when 'friends' fight for fun, so…"



"That wasn't what I said at all!" Crom interjected.



"Why don't we go inside and put on your scarf first, Pleo," Kiran sighed, "We should probably take this one step at a time."



The young Lugia cocked his head, but not seeing the harm in the matter, decided to follow Kiran's heed and follow him and the other members of Team Traveler into the tiled hut.


On the plus side, Kiran is looking to take it slow... Somehow I suspect it STILL won't be going well... :copyka:

The interior of the Dojo was far more impressive than its shabby exterior let on. Inside there were simple, but neatly-laid, wooden floors. The roof and walls were composed of clean-cut wooden beams separated by partitions made mostly of brownish paper. It became apparent when walking in that the "hut" was merely the entrance to the dojo, and that the "wings" were really covered corridors that lead to other huts, and to encircled grounds with boundaries neatly demarcated by lines in sand.


Hmm! Seems very traditional Japanese-inspired! :eyes:

Very cool! :okgon:

"So this is a 'Dojo?’" Pleo asked as Nida drew her paws back from affixing a navy blue scarf around Pleo's neck. The young Lugia looked around, mesmerized by this strange complex that seemed rather unlike anything else he had seen so far in Bluewhorl.
I just realized that Pleo doubles as a narrative vehicle to help the audience acclimate to the world of your fic! We get to see Pleo learn AND it helps to clarify things your readers may be curious about!:eyes:

Beautifully done on that! :veelove:



"Mmm hmm! This is where Maestra Mosca's gonna teach you how to get tough!" Crom cheerily answered.



"'Maestra Mosca'?" Pleo asked.



"That would be me," a voice answered from down the corridor.
Poor Pleo... She already sounds imposing! This is NOT going to be fun for him... :copyka:

The speaker drew nearer and revealed itself to be a Hawlucha. The ground-bound bird walked towards the group with a sagely calm that seemed at odds with her garish green, magenta, and white plumage as she drew near to the waiting group and greeted them with a bow.


Ah, a Hawlucha seems like a fitting choice. :quag:

"I must say, when Guildmaster Hatteras asked me to train the Protector, at first I had thought that he had accidentally ordered an overly stiff drink from one of the Juice Bars!" Mosca chuckled a bit.



"But, now that I see the truth of the matter, I must say that I am deeply honored to be able to mentor you as our Protector, pollito."


Well. At least it seems like Mosca seems to recognize the importance of training Pleo.

"But my name's Pleo," the young Lugia insisted after an awkward pause.



"Of course it is. Anyhow, the training chamber Guildmaster Hatteras arranged for you is this way," the Hawlucha replied, before ushering Team Traveler down a corridor which passed some streamside huts on one side and a series of fields in between buildings and covered corridors on the other.



"So… What is training?" Pleo asked the Hawlucha, "Crom tried to tell me on the way over, but I didn't really understand what he was saying."



"'Training' in the strictest sense is merely readying yourself for the challenges of life by making challenges of your own to conquer," Mosca answered as she lead the group into a turn around an intersecting corridor. "To make battles that you can safely retreat from in order to prepare for those that you can't run from."
I bet it was interesting having to come up with or look up basic definitions for things like training when writing this! I also find this definition to be a good one.

"What does that mea-?" Pleo blinked, before a shrill shout cut him off.



"Kyaaah!"



The group turned from the sound of the cry to see a Mawile and Luxio locked in combat in a rectangular courtyard. Along the courtyard's edges, various Pokémon worked in teams of two to maintain translucent barriers of what seemed to be light. On sidelines behind them, a much larger body of Pokémon cheered on the two opponents, most of them wearing lavender scarves that had been scrunched and folded up into headbands and made it impossible to tell whether or not the cloth had any designs on them. The Mawile too wore one of these headbands, and had just narrowly weaved around an arcing whitish-yellow bolt of electricity that the Luxio further behind shot out at him.



"Haw, haw! Is that the best you've got, ya little guild runt?" the Mawile called over his shoulder. "I've fought off ferals that hit harder than-! Oof!"

The Luxio cut off her opponent by lunging and pinning him down. She reared her head back before sinking her sharp teeth, cloaked in flame, into the maw-like horns on the Mawile's head.

The creature was forced to let go almost quickly as she had clamped down, as the Mawile instinctively flung his head about to fling off his assailant. After tumbling a distance, the Luxio bounded away as her opponent was preoccupied with nursing the sting of the flaming bite, before taking a moment of its own to retort in kind from a good distance.

"Maybe you should do something more with those jaws of yours than just talk! I thought you were supposed to be a guard!"



"Wow!" Pleo exclaimed. "So that's what we're going to do today?"
Pleo isn't worried about it hurting?! :wowzard:


The Mawile took a moment to brush himself off, shake some sensation back into his second maw on his head, and get back onto his feet, scowling determinedly back at the opponent Luxio.



"Hmm, not bad, but it'll take more than that to finish me- Eh?!"



And then, the Mawile's eyes caught sight of Pleo. As did those of the Luxio, followed one by one by the rest of the shielding and gawking Pokémon on the sidelines, the frenzy of battle broken by their awed stare at the white and blue guardian in the corridor.



"Hi!" the little guardian waved. "So, I'm gonna get to fight one of y-?"



"Ahehe… Not quite, Pleo," Kiran laughed nervously as he tucked Pleo's wing down. "Para ser fuerte, you can't go throwing yourself into the thick of things!"



"Otro día, pollito. Please follow me this way," Mosca quickly replied, "As for the rest of you, don't you have a battle to be getting back to?"

I'm still surprised Pleo doesn't equate battle with pain and pain with poison. Perhaps you are planning to have the training go poorly and these elements will be brought up later. If not, it seems like you are missing an opportunity to have Pleo be a bit shy and pain/battle avoidant which would make for gripping emotional turmoil for readers like me. The rest of the cast could then help Pleo get over his fear of it and make Pleo's presumable battle prowess later in the fic feel more earned.

But these are my thoughts as I go. You may already have a great way of going about things...


"Oi! Less staring, more sparring!" a Girafarig from the sidelines, apparently the referee, cried out with both its mouths, as the Pokémon in the courtyard began to uneasily pull themselves away back to the Mawile and Luxio, who slowly eased themselves back into battle positions. 



"Wait, everyone was looking at something? What was it?" a Zubat asked, before the noise of the returning din of battle drowned its voice out and grew indistinct as Team Traveler continued to move further away.



"... But why can't I fight?" Pleo asked in a pouting tone.


"Most of those Pokémon are guards, Pleo," Nida explained, "Their training focuses on fighting because if anything bad in town happens, they'll need to help protect the town from it."



"But if they also protect things, and I'm a 'Protector'... Shouldn't I also be doing their training?" Pleo asked.


Hmm... I suspect Pleo won't be singing the same tune once the battling actually begins with him. But we shall see.

"You will eventually. Why, who knows? Perhaps I'll wind up sparring with you myself to see how you fare against my world-famous Plancha Voladora!" Mosca proudly declared as she slid a partition open to peek into a wooden hut by the stream. "But before that, there are some fundamentals that you must learn. This way."
I imagine the upper capabilities of Pleo outshines anyone on their entire island even though he is far away from that level now.


Inside the hut were a series of high partitions that, unlike the others seen in the complex, were fashioned from solid wood. The panels reached up to a net strung along some rafters, having the net effect of making a rough cube of netting and wooden partitions.



Mosca shut the partition behind her, and led the group up to an entrance of the cube in the middle of the room. There, Crom handed off his bag of bread to her, which she set beside the cube's entrance.



"For today's exercise, we will doing a mock-up of a dungeon crawling experience that you will all surely find familiar one day," Mosca lectured, pointing at the wood-and-net cube behind her.



“Now, the dungeon is not too different from this maze behind me here. The layout's unpredictable, it's often hard to see things, and most importantly: there's treasure lying about," the Hawlucha continued, which immediately drew a curious inquiry from Pleo.



"Wait, there is-?"
Hmm... Did Pleo learn what treasure was yet?

Nifty setup in there though!

"However!", she interrupted, "Any dungeon, our own included, has its hazards. The ferals there will pick fights more often if they are threatened or moody, the Distortion creates traps, and most importantly, if you take too long, the Distortion will clear out the floor you are on."
Clear out the floor? Hmmm! :eyes:

"What does this have to do with the wall maze, though?" Crom asked.



"Everything! As a mock-up, you will need to put all of the skills and senses that you would need in the dungeon to use to find these loaves that your mother, Gwenith, so generously provided for us.



"If you can clear this gauntlet in time and make it out the end still standing, then, and only then will you be able to-"



It was then that Mosca found herself interrupted by the sound of munching, and of hard pecks against wood. The team's attention was then drawn to the bag by the entrance, where they noticed that it had already been half-emptied by Pleo, who was presently working on a half-devoured loaf on the floor.



"Wow… And I thought I was a fast eater," Crom murmured.
Well hey! He was hungry and no one fed him today!

"Psst! Pleo! You're supposed to eat those after you find them in the maze!" Nida hissed.



"Hmm? But they were right there! And the pink birdie said to find them!"

"We… Have a lot of work ahead of us, don't we?" Mosca sighed, putting a balled-up claw up to her face.
:mewlulz: love the detail of him digging in.




During the first few days after Pleo began his training at the Dojo, his progress was marked by fits and starts, mostly false ones. Still, he improved little by little. The monotony of the routine was broken by a midday recess, during which Team Traveler showed its newest member around Bluewhorl.



As it so chanced this particular day, Nida and Crom agreed to bring Pleo along into the town's square by the docks.


Seems like good choice to speed that section up. :okgon:

"Wow! I think these 'boat' thingies changed overnight, Nida!" Pleo exclaimed as he passed a wooden craft tied up along one of the docks, oblivious to the gapes that some of the nearby Pokémon interrupted their routines to give him.



"Well, they kinda did. Two went out last night, and two came in this morning," Crom explained. He took a short moment to perch on a post on the dock to stretch his wings in the sun.



"Eh? Where did the others go?"



"Probably to a nearby island to trade for some supplies," Nida answered, "There's some things that we wouldn't be able to normally get easily here on Tromba without them, and it helps some Pokémon like Crom's papi to support their families."



"'Trade'? What's that?" Pleo asked, tilting his head out of puzzlement.


Another good example of using Pleo as a means of conveying some world building. :okgon:

"Eh? Nida, did we not buy anything with Pleo before?" Crom asked, turning slightly from his sunning on the post.



"Now that I think about it," Nida pondered, drawing a paw to her muzzle in thought, "I guess we haven't."



It was then that she happened to catch a glance of a certain rude wooden shack from the corner of her eye, and with a devious smirk, she turned back to Pleo.



"Actually, let's fix that right now. The team could use a few more supplies anyways," Nida said, as she hopped off towards the hut.


Oh! Is she going to get a 'protector' discount?? :mewlulz:

Pleo gave a quizzical look to Crom, who shrugged his shoulders and dismounted his post. The two nimbly followed Nida to make up for her head start, and caught up with her just in time to see her hopping up a stump next to a wooden counter on the shack.



"Hey! Calino! Are you back there?" the Nidoran called to the back of the shack.



"Speaking!" answered a Kecleon who popped up from behind some boxes. The creature made its way over, changing his scales to the customary viridian that he tried to greet all his customers with.
Love the detail about his scales changing. :quag:

"What can I do you for to- Oh!"



And saw that the Protector he had heard so much about in recent days had graced his shop with a visit!



"Ahehe, it is truly an honor to have you here, Protector," Calino said, giving a small bow from behind the counter.



"Oh really now?" Nida said in an accusing tone, lowering her ears to play up a sense of grievance, "I seem to remember that you said that you wouldn't give even the Protector a discount if he was a rookie!"


Ooo little Nida is milking it! :mewlulz:

"Oh! Er..." Calino stammered, his scales starting to flush an embarrassed burnt yellow, "Well, you know, Nida, that was all hypotheticals! I wasn't honestly expecting that the Protector would be awakened in my lifetime, so-"



"So… You'll give that discount on whatever we buy today, then?" Nida asked in a saccharine tone, perking her ears up.



"Haha! You mean for yourself, yes?" Calino chortled. "When you sprout white feathers and wings like this Lugia here, we'll talk-"



"I want to get whatever Nida buys!" Pleo cheerily proclaimed to the Kecleon, waving his wings.



"E-Eh?!" the Kecleon cried out in surprise, his body rapidly turning white.
I'm smiling and rubbing my hands together, just so you know! :veelove:


"So you'll give a discount now?" Nida insisted, giving a cheery head tilt.



"Uhm… I mean-! Th-This isn't fair, Nida! Hiding behind the Pro-!"



"You did just imply that you'd cut a deal for Pleo, Calino," Crom said, as a few Pokémon passing by began to stop to watch the exchange between Calino and his young, if surprisingly tough customers.



"W-Would buy one get one half off-?"



"Seriously, Calino? Just how much Poké do you expect Pleo to have after a week around here?" Nida sighed, flicking her ears back as some of the nearby residents chimed in.



"Yeah, Calino, don't be such a tightwad!" Scout called from the water beside the dock.



"Can't you even cut the Protector a break?" a Corsola from the harbor cried.
The pressure is ON! :mewlulz:



"B-Buy one get one free! That's my final offer!" Calino cried, his scales now tinged a desperate grayish-blue as he eagerly tried to save some face, "Why, my poor purse couldn't possibly take more than that!"



"'Free'?" Pleo asked.



"It means that he'll give us an extra thing for whatever we buy!"



"Oh! Okay!" the young Lugia chirped, happy that he had helped to get his friends some extra goodies.



"Thanks for explaining, Crom," Nida replied before turning to Calino. "I'll take the usual again, this time with an extra Cross-Eye Seed!"



Calino couldn't help but grumble, his extremities flushing red at the tips as he put together a double portion of Nida's mostly-customary selection of items

 as she slid some glinting baubles onto the counter.
The earlier set up for this makes this shopping scene pretty darn satisfying. It also gives readers yet ANOTHER reason to like Pleo! :veelove:

Which will make Pleo getting kidnapped in the future all the more traumatic. (Assuming that happens at some point.)

"What is it that you're giving him, Nida?" Pleo asked.



"It's Poké, the money that's used in this town," she explained.



"'Money'?"



"It's kinda like trading food, except the food never goes bad… And you can't eat it... I guess it's not like food at all, now that I think about it," Crom mused with a claw up against his chin before a certain Swellow's voice abruptly cut short his train of thought.



"Nida! Crom! What are you two doing? Pleo's training session was supposed to start again 10 minutes ago!" Kiran admonished mid-flight from above the shops behind the group.

"Uh oh. Looks like we'll have to get going, Pleo," Crom said, before tromping off after his team's Swellow leader. After a moment's hesitation, Pleo waddled along, occasionally hopping from the ground with the beat of his wings.



"Thanks for the discount, Calino!" Nida called out to the Kecleon, bounding away after her teammates.



"Uh huh, sure," the merchant groaned, putting a claw to his face.

 "Gods these days."


:mewlulz:

"Oh, so you do have things that you care about more than money, Calino," a certain Sentret piped up while passing by the counter. "That's honestly surprising."



"Scout, could you not right now?" a now fully-red Calino fumed.
I hope you bring Calino back again later. Disgruntled shopkeepers are amusing. :mewlulz:



Soon enough, Pleo found himself back within the wooden corridors of the Dojo's maze. Although he had been in there more times than he could count on one of his wings by then, the experience was still disorienting. Outside of intersections and rooms, the list of directions where one could'nt see far. in any meaningful direction was short: Just forward down the corridor, behind oneself, and, if it wasn't covered by a chunk of the next level of the maze like his present corridor, the netting that hung along the rafters in sections, but only where it wasn't covered like his present corridor.
📝My goodness this last sentence is long. It tripped me up a bit while reading it. Suggestions above. I tried to word it better for clarity too since the structure of how you worded it tripped me up a bit too. Also split it into two sentences.


"See anything, Pleo?" an unseen Nidoran called out.



"Yeah, we should have three more loaves left!" the voice of an also-absent Druddigon added.

Even though Nida and Crom had taught him some handy tips for training over the last few days., Like how such as that the two didn't disappear when Pleo couldn't see them, or to always mark his place and pick the next closest direction if he got stuck at an intersection. Even so, the isolation of the maze always felt unnerving...
📝 Some fixes. Sentence was very long again. My war on the word 'had' continues. Most cases where it's used you can trim it away without losing meaning. Tips by their nature are handy so you can cut out 'handy'. Fixing it up this way also draws more attention to the fact that Pleo apparently learned object permanence! Which made me smile. :mewlulz:



"I smell it, but nothing yet-" Pleo called, as he rounded a sharp turn in the maze. As his the corridor on his left progressively became less obscured by one of the maze's walls, Pleo noticed one of Gwenith's golden-brown loaves sitting at a dead end.


📝 extra 'his'

"Oh! I found it! I found it!" Pleo cheered, as he veered to the left of the corridor to waddle towards his prize.


"I've got i-!"



Click.
No way that could be a trap! :unquag:

The faint sound of a trap triggering resounded, followed by a stiff smack from underneath by something cold, slimy, and smelling of earth, causing Pleo to pitch forward.


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"A-Ah!"



"Pleo! Are you alright?!" Nida cried out from deeper in the maze, "What happened?"



As Pleo picked himself up from the floor, he looked down and found that the entire lower half of his body had been covered in thick, damp mud. When he turned back to the place where he had stumbled, he found that the mud that struck him had been splattered radially all over the corridor. 



"Yes, but I just got a bunch of brown goop stuck on my legs and wings!"



"Oh, you probably stepped on a mud trap!" Crom's voice called out over the walls.



"Simulated mud trap!" Mosca's muffled voice from outside the maze's partitions corrected.
Oh no, not ANOTHER ONE! :unquag:

First the mayor with his scarfs and now Mosca with his 'simulated' traps! :mewlulz:



"Whatever!"



"Pleo, can you move alright?" Nida's voice asked.



Pleo attempted to shake off some of the mud, finding that it weighed down his legs and wings. While he was able to get some of it off, the majority of it remained stuck in his feathers and continued to uncomfortably encumber his movements.


"Not really!" he answered back.



"Just clean off what you can and play through it for now!" Nida's voice cried back. "Mud Traps affect your ability to fight depending on what part of your body they gum up. It'll go away eventually as you get the mud out!"



"Okay!"


Pleo seems to be dealing with training rather well so far! But I suppose a big part of why is because it's maze exploration. A sensible thing for him to start with rather than Pokemon battles right away. :okgon:

"And pay closer attention to the floor from now on!" Crom's voice added. "If you see one that has a pattern kinda like an arrow, step on that one! It'll pump you up and clear up that trap's effects right away!"

Pleo snatched up the loaf by pressing it in between his wings and backtracked down the corridor. He made sure to keenly avoid the center of the mud splatter as he made his way back to an intersection with three other corridors stemming from it. There he attempted to scrape some of the mud off onto a corner before he paused for a moment.



"Let's see… The one that I didn't go down should be on the… Right!" he chirped, as he turned down his chosen direction. The young Lugia continued on under the shadow of the next floor, leaving a small trail of muddy footprints and splatters as he carried on down the corridor's bends and turns. As Pleo entered a small chamber with two narrow passages leading out, one forward and a smaller one to the left, he could overhear Nida's voice call out.

"I found another one!"



"Okay, so then there's just one left!" his other partner replied.
I bet you were happy to write this with them calling out. Seems like a nice easy section for prose!

Pleo paused for a moment. After realizing that he had already marked his position (in a manner of speaking) from the flecked mud trail still following him, he decided to follow the "next closest" direction rule and head to the left corridor. He carried on a ways, until he noticed a break in the pattern of the floorboards below his feet where some jagged rocks were poking out.

"There's pointy rocks in the bottom of the floor like last time!"



"It's probably another trap!" Nida called out "Can you get around it?"



Pleo went up to the trap, keen to keep his feet a healthy distance from where its edge might possibly be, and saw that the corridor was narrow enough for the patch of embedded stones to span its entire width.



"I don't think so!" he called back.



"Turn around and try another path, then!" Crom's voice piped up, which prompted the Lugia to sigh at just how hard this 'training' thing was as he retraced his muddy steps back to the chamber.



He then noticed that as he got closer to the other corridor, the smell of toasted grain lingered in the air. Pleo made his way down the passage a bit more briskly, keenly watching the floor.



"Oof!"



Perhaps a bit too keenly, as he bumped his head into a wall. After he drawing back and giving his head a good shake to regain his bearings, Pleo noticed the last loaf lying in the middle of the corridor.

"I found the last loaf!" he cheered, seizing the piece of bread with his mouth.


Pleo on fire with gathering! :cool:

"Alright, great! Now we just need to find each other... Did any of you see the stairs by any chance?" Nida's voice echoed down the corridors.



"Nop- Oh wait, I just found them, Nida!" Crom hastily announced.



"Alright! We'll come to you, Crom! What should we be looking for?"



"Claw marks!"



… Hopefully Mosca would be understanding about that. After all, there were already a bunch of nicks in the maze panels already, right? As Pleo backtracked his way towards where he and Nida had split up, he discovered that sure enough, Crom had scratched little reminders to himself into the panels.



A scratch on a corridor here, a gash on a corridor there, an occasional tracing of a dead end that Crom had gone down. So went the process of plodding along and trying to piece together these clues to follow the young Druddigon's steps.



"Hey!"



Pleo soon found himself looking up at Crom waving at him from beside some stairs.



"Don't eat those until after we get out!"



"I wathnth!" Pleo protested through a beak filled with bread loaf. Crom quickly darted over and took the remaining pieces of bread, depositing them into the bag Kiran had let him borrow for training.
Love the detail of the muffled speech. :mewlulz:

"Here, while we wait, lemme try and get that mud out of your feathers," Crom offered, as he prompted Pleo to raise his wings and began to carefully rake the mud out with his claws.



"Are the other floors of the cave also like this?" Pleo asked.



"Kinda. They're not as boxy or wooden, and in the places where Kiran takes us, the Distortion usually makes them a lot more open," Crom replied, as he flicked off globs of mud before moving on to one of Pleo's legs.



"The… Distortion?"



"You know, rearranges the Mystery Dungeon... creates orbs and traps… changes plant seeds into the sort that Calino sells from his shop... occasionally makes a forgotten gummi or apple left in there into a super-special gummi or apple if the ferals don't eat it first," Crom explained.



"But then why aren't we training there?"



"Eh?! The Mystery Dungeon is a lot more dangerous than here! That's why Maestra Mosca has this maze! So that way Pokémon can practice and go home easily if they mess something up!"



"Dangerous?" Pleo asked, cocking his head as Crom quickly wiped off Pleo's badge and then moved his attention to cleaning a few stray spots on the Lugia's plumage that he had not already gone over.



"It's a place where you can get hurt a lot more easily," Crom responded.



"But if it hurts you easier, why do you go there?"



"Because it's training for us. A Pokémon on a Rescue Team needs to be able to not run away from danger or scary things all the time, because in the future, someone might be counting on you to help them," the Druddigon explained.



"Someone… Might be counting on you," Pleo repeated, as Nida's voice interrupted from behind him.
Pleo is already learning so much. I sense he will grow up fast in the scope of this fic. It's neat to see him so inexperienced compared to how capable I assume he will eventually become. :quag:

"Oi!"



And Pleo turned to see Nida setting some bread loaves that had visible bite and drag marks down on the ground.



"Well, I suppose that that's one way to spend half a week," Nida sighed.



"Well… Think of it this way, it's only been half a week, and we've managed to make it with Pleo to the sparring partner!" Crom cheerily replied as he stuffed Nida's loaves into his bag.


Croms sentence isn't making sense to me. 'make it with Pleo to the sparring partner'? Huh? I'm not sure what Crom meant to convey, but this isn't making sense...

"Uhm… Crom, you realize Pleo has to win against said sparring partner before he can move on, right?" Nida whispered, as she watched Pleo beat his wings, enjoying his regained mobility now that the mud caking his body was gone, minus a few stains on his feathers.
So... progress in training or in the maze happens until they reach the end where there is a sparing partner? Implying they were not able to make it that far until today? I think I'm getting it now.

Still, I read over the previous line from Crom multiple times trying to figure it out. I feel like there is a better way of setting this up. Maybe if there was a basic explanation of what they were trying to do at some point before? It's not a huge deal, I guess since it's explained so soon after, but figured I'd mention it anyway.

"Ah, we're fighting as a team of three, I'm sure we'll do fine!" Crom replied back in a hushed tone.



"Nida? Crom? What are you talking about? Aren't we going up the stairs?" Pleo interrupted.



"Heh. We were just talking about that, actually," Nida said as she began to make her way up the stairs, and lead her teammates on.



"So, a 'sparring partner' is a Pokémon that you fight, right?" Pleo asked.



"Sorta. They give you a battle in which they hold back a little so that you can use the chance to improve how you fight," the Nidoran explained as the group reached the top of the stairs and the last level of the maze.



"Hmm? But who is Maestra Mosca going to have us spar with-?" Pleo asked as he gawked at the now unobstructed view of the netting above, before a low, familiar voice interrupted.



"Hello, Crom. I was beginning to wonder when you were going to make it up here."



The three Pokémon paused, blinked, and stopped a moment to make sure their eyes were not being deceived by the sight of the large Druddigon waiting in the room, standing between wall partitions that went up to her chest.

"Wait… Mom? You're our sparring partner?" Crom asked incredulously.
WHAAAAT!? :wowzard:

Oh wow! She is probably going to be one TOUGH opponent! :wowzard:

She is MUCH larger than Crom! It's like fighting Crom with a mushroom powerup in Super Smash Bros or something! 😅



Author's Notes:

- Maestra - Spanish: "Teacher", "Master". Maestro for male counterparts.
- Para ser fuerte - Spanish: "To be strong"
- Otro día - Spanish: "Another day"
- Plancha Voladora - Spanish: lit. "Iron Flying", referring to the move we would better know as "Flying Press"
Again, I enjoy your use of spanish vocabulary. In a weird way, it's helping me pick up a little bit of Spanish! :quag:

Closing thoughts:
What a twist at the end! :wowzard:This is going to make for a very interesting next chapter. :eyes: Now it makes sense why Crom's mom's bread was being used so much! :mewlulz:

Nida better put on a good show. It's for her future mother in law after all! :veelove:

I do think she will make a good first sparing partner. If Pleo gets upset or cries she will probably hold back more. Pleo should be in good hands here. 😌

I thought it was going to be Kiran at first. But I guess it makes sense. Kiran would probably fly circles around them. I doubt any of them would be able to even hit him as they are now. Much less beat him.

The fic seems to be doing a good job at taking its time properly but still condenses things in the right places by the right amounts. :okgon:

As for the chapter title, I see what you did there! Wheat. Bread. Training. :mewlulz:

And that's it for me for a little while until you get some more reviews in for me, but I look forward to returning to this again soon! :veelove:
 

Spiteful Murkrow

Busy Writing Stories I Want to Read
Pronouns
He/Him/His
Partners
  1. nidoran-f
  2. druddigon
  3. swellow
  4. lugia
  5. growlithe
  6. quilava-fobbie
  7. sneasel-kate
  8. heliolisk-fobbie
  9. axew-irune
Hey everybody, it’s been a little while since Virgil and I last bumped this story, and we built up… uh… quite a few more reviews than we were expecting to get in the intervening timeframe. We’re not complaining about it, though it means that the responses this time around will generally be on the more condensed side relative to normal:

@Arukona
A pity that no matter where he goes, Pleo's always gonna stick out like a sore thumb. :sadbees: I wonder if part of him wishes he was a more ordinary 'mon instead of a Legendary if it meant he wouldn't be as recognisable as he was.

I wouldn’t have been super shocked if the thought idly crossed his mind a couple times, but otherwise I think he’s pretty used to just being a Lugia. Though hold onto that thought about sticking out like a sore thumb…

Heh, nice title drop.

Blame Amby for that one, since he suggested that line way back in the day. :V

Would pink truly stick out more than white in Pleo's case? Although I feel like Pleo would still stick out like a sore thumb no matter what colour his plumage was.

That’s just a shiny reference there.

Ah yes, the Guildmaster that turned out to be a bit of a wrong'un. This can only end well, I'm sure. :unquag:

Yeah, we actually didn’t pick up on the significance of what the Guildmaster was up to here until much later in GL. There’s a bit of foreshadowing for both our stories in the different halves of the crossover.

Oh yeah, that's right, Latias and Lugia were partners in GL, weren't they? That's gotta make for one awkward meeting right here and now given how there's only one Lugia in Horizon and all the Legends are immortal there.

Yuuuuup, though it made for a funny/cute encounter in this crossover.

Hearing the explanation of how the Prism Virus works again does strike the dark thought in my mind of what would happen if one of our heroes got infected. Especially Pleo, given his Legendary-ness and the nefarious powers the Prism Virus could awaken within him. :unquag:

Which is precisely the reason why the gang is noping out hard and opting to go back to their own world there.

Stealth challenge failed immediately there. C'mon, Elty, I thought you'd at least know a thing or two about that given your pirate credentials. :sadbees:

Elty: “I’m more of a ‘pillage, plunder, rifle and loot’ sorta ‘mon. Do you have any idea how hard it is to be sneaky while doing that?”
:eltywtf:


Quite a problem when you're a deity with as much power as Necrozma, where a simple sneeze opens up dimensional rifts everywhere. Who knows what other fic crossovers could have happened as a result of this?

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Definitely a fun hypothetical for considering the sort of ripple effects it could’ve had on this alternate timeline, though. Since ripping holes between universes seems like the sort of thing that would have some lingering side effects.

Oh, all of these characters from GL, all poor souls afflicted by the horrors that have happened so far. :sadwott: I do like that Pleo takes this as a leanring experience, that seeing the folks in Horizon suffering like this gives a possible insight into a Bad End for Anyilla and how it'll redouble his efforts to make that not happen.

Yeah, this was actually one of my favorite moments of our end of the GL crossover. Fledglings has been hinting for a while as to what drives that “super mode” of Pleo’s, and this was a chance to play around with it here.

I wonder how Team Fang would fare in Anyilla. Probably just as poorly - either that or straight into the leagues of pirates with them.

You’ll probably get some ideas later on in Fledglings, really.

Well, that was a fun little jaunt into the world of Guiding Light and seeing a good few of that fic's cast, some that I haven't read in quite some time. It was nice getting reacquainted with them, and it was interesting seeing how our current heroes interacted with them at a point in the fic before everyone really starts going downhill for just about everyone involved in the world of Horizon. Even then, seeing Necky proved to be a nerve-wracking moment for our heroes, even in spite of the fact they overcame him in the end. (Imagine if they'd encountered Zero - Pleo would be an on-sight target for her. :unquag:)

Yeeeeeeah, they got a wee bit lucky with that hostile encounter roll all things considered.

Certain moments in this little arc stuck out to me - namely the adoration showered on Pleo as a change from the norm back on Anyilla, and the trick Elty played on Lycanroc by throwing them into the portal. The reactions to seeing a little Lugia as opposed to the big one the world knows well was also kinda funny, and it did make me wonder how Pleo would react to seeing a fellow Lugia had he met GL!Lugia in this arc. A fun thing to wonder, I suppose.

It’s a fun what-if to consider, even if the spot that this crossover slotted into chronologically with in GL made it a bit hard to have little big bird bump into big big bird. Perhaps if we ever get motivated to do another crossover someday™.

I liked this arc. But back to business next time, where things alas aren't so rosy for our heroes. Still, surely better than what'll happen in Horizon, right? :copyka:

:copyber:


Cabot, why are you throwing your lot in with these guys, you deserve better than serving this evil scheme :sadbees:

Cabot: “Wh-Wha-?! ‘Evil scheme’?! You have things completely backwards! The Empire are the good guys!”
:ShockedCabot:


I wonder if sparing Nida, Guardia and Elty is a sign of Nagant maybe having some degree of honour, compared to more nefarious Imperials we might meet later on down the road. I have heard on the grapevine that Nida gets imprisoned at some point later on... Still doesn't mean our resident misnamed Clawitzer's getting off the hook. :screm:

Hold onto those thoughts there…

Welp, seems like Alvise has bad memories of this place. Guessing the Empire did some not-so-kind things to his family and that might well be why the Manectric's an outlaw.

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The mention of Trouble Center brings to mind the same thing from Paper Mario: The Thousand Year Door and I'm curious now if that was the inspiration here. Given the dinginess of this shack, it does indeed bring Rogueport to mind.

It was indeed the inspiration behind the Trouble Center down to the name, yes.

I hear the 'pal' and Detective Gumshoe immediately comes to mind. If he's part of the inspiration for this guy, I think I'm gonna like him. he does seem to be a good sort, at least, so our heroes mightn't have an issue placing their trust in him.

Oh, I’m sure you loved him then, since Cardino was indeed mainlining a lot of Detective Gumshoe energy.

They must be a distant relative of Crom who goes by the name of Mart.

Maybe, even if the FE reference pool in this story is already a little crowded. You’ve met one of them in the past.

Wooooow, even your queen gets your name wrong, Nagant. :mewlulz: Maybe that's an indicator to consider changing it?

I’m pretty sure that making that suggestion to her face would be one way to find out whether or not Clawitzer can make a noise approximating a shotgun racking when getting ready to fire off an attack. :copyka:

Nice to see that even she can appreciate Pleo's cuteness. Once again the mention of big and imposing Protectors does juxtapose with little Pleo and the thought of him being big and imposing like most Lugia are is quite an image. Hopefully he'd still be a big softie. :veelove:

Pleo will have some time before he gets there, but I’d like to imagine that at least a part of him would still be one well after he’s grown up.

By how Cabot suggested that Pleo would see his friends again, part of me wonders if he might possibly try to renege on his allegiances and try to bring Pleo home, in the events that Aleria and Osborn won't arrange for that. :eyes:

I think that our dino friend there has a few steps to take before he gets from here to there, since at least at this point in time, he’s an Imperial through-and-through.

Oh boy, a tournament arc's upcoming? Well, there's a reason for all of Pleo's chasers to gather together in the one place. All while gaining plenty more eyes on him for folks to want to pilfer him for themselves. The latter of which is, er, not encouraging for Team Traveller's chances to get him back. :unquag:

Nida: “Don’t remind me.” >_>;

Is Nico's name a play on Nick, Phoenix's nickname in Ace Attorney? Fitting that they're a 'mon that could be defined as phoenix-like if so. And if Rita's meant to be a Maya analogue, then even more neat to see her as a Ghost-type - in other words, a spirit channeler. :quag:

Your read on this was basically on the mark there, since much of the courtroom cast are fairly transparent AA nods.

Back Team AVN go to the Mistral Marauder, where they'll probably be the trio sent to win the tournament and Pleo.

Valatos: “‘AVN’? Really? That’s not even a proper-!”
Alvise: “No, no, I could get used to this!”
:AlviseDetermined:


Looks like the Ellsberg-Ketu partnership continues, even in combat. Along with a bunch of new name layabouts on Lyn's crew who clearly love taking it easy by their rates of napping.

Ellsberg:
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Ketu: “Yeah, well get used to it since we’re working for a common cause now.” >_>;

Well, looks like Sibich's the culprit here. But how to prove it in an Ace Attorney style fashion with a big dramatic breakdown on our resident Cofagrigus's end?

Hold onto those thoughts there.

Bribe-proof authorities, huh? A pity the common strat employed by Team Forager in Once a Thief doesn't work in the other Fobbiefic world. :sadbees:

It’s a bit more hit-or-miss in this setting by virtue of the world’s circumstances being a bit less dire. If they had brought tea along, they might have had a bit more luck.

I see someone pilfered Shane's name for the Alolapix. Maybe for that brief time he was in Anyilla, the nickname somehow filtered through.

[...]

Seems to be a common trend with Alolapixes in PMD fics to get their pristine fur dirty. :mewlulz:

That’s because those would be deliberate GL references there. >:V

And a Slowking as the Judge is a pretty good pick. Even if I myself would sooner pick a greybeard 'mon like a Drampa (or a Wyrdeer were this to come later).

Slowking won out for us since it has that ‘sagely but goofy’ sort of vibe, even if those other castings would’ve been pretty fun hypotheticals.

Okay never mind, there seems to be a bit of Payne in there too. Well, good news for the defence, hopefully, if Payne's win streak or lack thereof is anything to go by?

I mean, the fact that his name sounds like ‘achin(g)’ wasn’t a big enough clue there? :p

And it seems this might've been a fortuitous encounter, because it seems Cardino has a lead in relation to Luca, and whoever the Don happens to be. So these three are essentially mafiosi, are they...? :eyes:

:blobyes:


Oh, so he's the papa? Yeah, okay, fair enough to Alvise for acting skittish at the mere mention of Tidemill. Did he by any chance abscond with someone and escape town that way like Frankie and Francesca from Paper Mario TTYD?

Does it count if he absconded with himself? :V

Oh, so he's just openly racist towards his own Marked crew and prepared to throw them under the bus. Good to know there's another point on the rap sheet. :screm:

Even with the evidence placed in front of him, he's pleading the fifth? My goodness is this guy a piece of work, although that seemed to be the case from the first meeting.

Yeah, Sibich is a nice™ guy, as I’m sure you saw when reading Casting Off.

Would this have been the same town that featured in Casting Off? :eyes: The same one in which Cabot had a tiff with his parents about joining the Imperial Navy?

Once again:

:blobyes:


A Sneasler? Huh, I didn't think we were onto the PLA 'mons being a thing yet. Unless this is a retroactive addition?

It’s a retroactive addition that was put into the chapter, yes.

And that's another batch of chapters done. These were fun to read and review, of seeing the tournament for Pleo underway and his new arc, where he has to put up with developments out of his control thanks to Nagant and Queen Aleria, but still able to find comfort in Cabot who reads bedtime stories to him. And Cabot, in taking the role as his mentor, is definitely going to be able to forge a closer bond with him now and might well be the one to let him reunite with his friends. I'm still gonna put a feather (get it? Because Pleo's a bird) in my theory of him doing a Heel-Face Turn to the Guard in order to help Pleo out.

Some fun references too - I particularly liked the Ace Attorney analogues, especially with the defence attorney being a literal phoenix, and his assistant being a ghost. :quag: Plus Cardino having Gumshoe elements to him with his 'pal' tick, I really enjoyed that.

Glad to hear that you had fun with these, since they were a lot of fun for us to play around with back in the day.

The only thing I admittedly found a bit conflicted about was the amount of the characters that happened to be in this arc. Even for me who typically likes big cast adventures, it was quite a lot even for my tastes, where there's a bunch of new characters like Cardino, Aleria, Thalez, Nico and Rita to keep track of on top of the sheer amount of previous characters rocking into town gunning to get their hands on Pleo. I understand that some might fall by the wayside and thus there won't be a huge need to keep track of them for much longer once the plot moves onto other places (which in my eyes isn't necessarily a bad thing provided they're given at least one callback later on). But yeah - too many POVs to have to manage and the wordcount tends to bloat quite a lot.

Yeeeeeeah, there were definitely a lot of perspectives flying around in that episode. Though in the end, we think that everything that we did ultimately was worth it, since you’ll be seeing stuff from this episode come up again a lot in the future.

Still, this was a fun read, and it's nice to chip away at more of the fic as I do most review events. Looking forward to getting back to it soon. :quag:

And we’ll be looking forward to hearing back from you! Thanks again for the review. ^^

@Tango
Somehow, I bet falling deeper into a dungeon can land one in extremely dangerous situations. She is also cut off from her party. This reminds me of a plot point from an anime I saw. Season 4 part 2 of DanMachi. That season was one of the best seasons of any anime I've ever seen. Hunted by a secret boss monster of unspeakable power. A fall down to the depths of the dungeon far beyond what the hero was prepared to deal with. Cut off from all but one of their entire party. Such an incredibly tense season! :wowzard:

I have to say, starting this chapter off in a similar circumstance is a potential setup for some extremely powerful storytelling. You certainly have my attention here! :eyes:

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Though glad to hear that the start of the chapter landed well for you.

This protector is going to be friendly. What a find for little Nida! I wonder what this will mean for her story? Will Lugia be with her through it all?? :eyes:

That’s something that you’ll have to read along to find out. >:V

:mewlulz: Ok this whole interaction is great! Glad to see Nida isn't in any real danger and seeing her get to know the protector is enjoyable!

And cute and fluffy.
:lugiyay:


Oh neat! This way you can have unique or even ancient things in dungeons that have remained that way! :eyes:

More or less, yeah. It was our guess as to how Pokémon could continue to live within Mystery Dungeons if the floors periodically get blown away every now and then.

Waaaaait. HOLD ON. This guy sees the FLIPPING SKY for the first time in his life and his focus is NOT on that?! Whaaaaaat???? :unquag:

I was expecting him to look up with wonder and comment about how he had no idea ceilings could get that high.

We went and slipped in a brief remark from him here about that, since it’s cute/funny enough to be worth throwing in.

I also half-expected him to take off flying to got get a rock from the 'ceiling' for them to play with only to come back a few minutes later saying that he thinks it might be better to look for rocks on the ground because the ceiling is VERY high! You could also use this as a moment to showcase his flying abilities having him take off like a jet into the sky initially maybe with a bunch of wind stirred up and them all being impressed or something. This would be another way to display his amazing power while still being funny! :mewlulz:

If you end up doing something like this, you gotta tell me because I'll want to read the new section, if so. :eyes:

This part, we won’t be doing, since Pleo being flightless here is very much a feature and not bug. You’ll see why in future chapters.

Hmm! I wonder if Lugia's mother is at the bottom? But it seems odd why her egg would be so far removed from there... I'm really curious! :eyes:

Almost as if his egg came about in not fully natural circumstances, huh?

Ah, I guess THIS is why you don't have him fly legendarily into the sky earlier! :unquag:

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Wait, is he switching scarfs to symbolize switching role from guild Master to mayor? :mewlulz:

:blobyes:


All that stuff they spoke about from the previous chapter? Driving away pirates, having incredible power? Lugia will likely do those things eventually! Lugia is not only alone with no family, but STILL has enormous potential. These guys just don't seem to get it. Not even the mayor.

Yes, but at the same time, he’s still babby and has no idea of how to wield that power just yet. So ‘watch over him while he’s weak and vulnerable’ is the operating assumption here.

But this guy is committed to ceremony! I think if someone came to murder him, he would have them pause for a moment for him to consider if he would rather be murdered as the mayor or the guildmaster. :mewlulz: He would then calmly ask his assailant why he is looking to murder him. Then, if he decided it was more for one persona than the other, he would keep the scarf he had or pick a new one. The assailant wants to murder the mayor specifically? Hatteras responds

I could buy it, though Hatteras isn’t quite a slouch as a fighter himself, so that probably wouldn’t end well for the attempted assassin.

Loved this interaction here. Crom is a little dense and Nida is SUPER embarrassed! :mewlulz: They already argue like they are a couple!

I can't wait to see them get together eventually. 🥰

Implying that they’re not already together now.

📝I think this last line is being said by Pleo, but I'm not 100% sure. Might be better to move the dialogue up to the previous paragraph for the sake of clarity.

We went with a different route and attached a speech tag here.

Also, poor Pleo. He doesn't understand any of this. He has no family or place to belong and Ander want's to leave him abandoned. But Ander really is afraid of Pleo being there, so I wonder why that is... I expect he will explain. This should be very interesting! :eyes:

Yeah, it’s also an introduction to how not everyone in this setting is looking forward to Pleo’s return.

Ok, I went back to the Prologue and re-read the story-time section to refamiliarize myself. Thankfully I remembered where to find that information. So the Marked wanted to take the place of the gods and used the star of destruction to wipe out the minor gods and create the wastes. Instead of gaining what they wanted, they pretty much destroyed the world instead. Arcus helped form the islands that remain and the Marked were allowed to live with the non-marked. I apologize for forgetting that information but I'll try to go back to refresh myself on things as needed.

But given that history, it seems odd that Ander would consider Lugia to be a bad thing. I guess the Marked have their own history and legends that differ from the others? Probably tell a version of history that is different from the one Nida was told as a kit. One where they aren't in as negative of a light and where the gods/protectors are seen as ominous and/or dangerous. If so, the question becomes which is true or which parts of which is true? Or is there a different truth out there different than what either of them believe? So many directions this could go! Very interesting to think about.

Hold onto those thoughts there.

You know... I bet your fic could benefit from an expansion to the glossary. Maybe to include character bios and definitions of terms taken from various chapters. Like, you expand it and can click to remind yourself of terms and things about characters from previous chapters. Might help readers keep the various concepts and characters together a little better. Almost like a spoiler-friendly wiki.

And that sounds like such a good idea, that I might try to implement something like that in my fic! :eyes: I've got a lot of characters and terms in my fic... I'd have to think about it a bit, but I feel like there is some potential there…

We’ve considered something like that in the past, but considering how much work creating a wiki like that would take, we decided not to.

No specifics. Just a bunch of 'ITS BAD!!' And this is the Marked that the Marked sent to represent them to the mayor? Either that, or he is just the first because he is the most panicked and jumped the gun. Maybe there is someone a lot more collected and specific who can speak on this matter later? Would certainly be interesting, if so.

It’s because he’s the most panicked and jumped the gun there.

Wow Machoke. That's pretty harsh. I get the sense the Marked aren't treated very nicely and are more like just tolerated. :sadbees:

But honestly, this form of prejudice is entirely expected in a world with the kind of history as this one. The Marked DID seem to cause the destruction of almost the entire world for no justifiable reason. Instead of being hunted and executed, they were allowed to live. Even in the cradle!

Yeah, and you’ll see this explored on both sides of the divide more in the future.

This is SO how kids would act. Marvelous depiction of them! :mewlulz: I can even hear their voices in my head with the exactly inflections they would use.

Glad to hear that their portrayal felt believable to you there. The characterization in this story is something that Virgil and I are particularly proud of.

Well those are some odd names... I'd expect them to be the other way around. Marley looks masculine and Teja looks feminine to me. Now, I didn't look either of these names up, and maybe they are traditionally exactly how you used them, but as a reader, that's how they look to me.

That’s a bit of an artifact of this story using Aerith and Bob naming. Teja is a masculine name… in South Asia. While Marley was chosen due to the fact that it’s a homophone to ‘marli’, the term for a doe rabbit in Watership Down.

Most definitely not. In fact, if there is a villain of this fic that they have to fight way later, they would lose to Mamarina if their plans prevented kit bedtimes. Nothing stands a chance against the power of bedtime. :unquag:

Well, some of them certainly would, yes. :copyka:

Hmm. Interesting that Nida would choose a story about controlling ones young to Pleo. Perhaps Nida feels like Pleo is her own young? At least, subconsciously anyway... But it's also about control. The type to avoid bad things from happening. Perhaps she is worried subconsciously that Pleo will turn out like Ander said? :eyes:

Either way, I think her choice of story says much more than it does on the surface. I can't tell if that was your intent here, but it's interesting regardless.

Nah, this is just a Watership Down reference in this story, along with a subtle hint as to what the seedbed for civilization in this setting was.

My goodness. Pleo has so much to learn! Very interesting concept for a character. Really learning everything from scratch! The readers presumably get to watch Pleo learn, grow, and acheive the expectations the island originally had for him. Should be quite the journey! :quag:

And how considering how long this story has become. :copyka:

Gwenith: "Oh, don't worry Cenn, I'm going to go hang around the sea god too, so it won't just be Crom!"
Cenn: What?! But now it's even LESS fair!
Gwenith: It's more fair for me.
Cenn: Can I at least have some bread?
Gwenith: Sorry. Gave it all to Crom.
Cenn: (That's the last straw. From here on out, I will become the greatest villiain the world has ever seen! I'll gather the marked under my banner and finish what they started so many years ago! And once I am the supreme ruler of this world? I'll have Pleo PLAY with me!)

Fortunately, Cenn is a bit better-natured than that. And any budding villain tendencies would’ve gotten bogged down in the not-too-distant future by… well, you’ll see when you get there.

📝traveling

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📝missing a dot

We went and fixed these.

I just realized that Pleo doubles as a narrative vehicle to help the audience acclimate to the world of your fic! We get to see Pleo learn AND it helps to clarify things your readers may be curious about!:eyes:

Beautifully done on that! :veelove:

Yup! One of the benefits of having a character that quite literally came from under a rock is that we get to have someone to show off the workings of the world to along with the reader. Even if he’s not the only character of that ilk that will pop up in this story.

Which will make Pleo getting kidnapped in the future all the more traumatic. (Assuming that happens at some point.)

Hold onto those thoughts as well.

📝My goodness this last sentence is long. It tripped me up a bit while reading it. Suggestions above. I tried to word it better for clarity too since the structure of how you worded it tripped me up a bit too. Also split it into two sentences.

We went and dropped in a version of your suggestions here.

📝 Some fixes. Sentence was very long again. My war on the word 'had' continues. Most cases where it's used you can trim it away without losing meaning. Tips by their nature are handy so you can cut out 'handy'. Fixing it up this way also draws more attention to the fact that Pleo apparently learned object permanence! Which made me smile. :mewlulz:

Ditto here.

📝 extra 'his'

And here.

Croms sentence isn't making sense to me. 'make it with Pleo to the sparring partner'? Huh? I'm not sure what Crom meant to convey, but this isn't making sense…

It’s meant to be “make it to the sparring partner with Pleo”. But we tweaked that there.

Oh wow! She is probably going to be one TOUGH opponent! :wowzard:

Assuming that she fought at full strength, anyways.

What a twist at the end! :wowzard:This is going to make for a very interesting next chapter. :eyes: Now it makes sense why Crom's mom's bread was being used so much! :mewlulz:

Nida better put on a good show. It's for her future mother in law after all! :veelove:

Nida: “Oh boy, no pressure there.”
:sweats~1:


I do think she will make a good first sparing partner. If Pleo gets upset or cries she will probably hold back more. Pleo should be in good hands here. 😌

I thought it was going to be Kiran at first. But I guess it makes sense. Kiran would probably fly circles around them. I doubt any of them would be able to even hit him as they are now. Much less beat him.

I mean, I wouldn’t be terribly surprised if Kiran was scheduled to do the honors at some point, but yeah. Pleo not really flying much almost certainly influenced the choice of sparring partner.

The fic seems to be doing a good job at taking its time properly but still condenses things in the right places by the right amounts. :okgon:

As for the chapter title, I see what you did there! Wheat. Bread. Training. :mewlulz:

And that's it for me for a little while until you get some more reviews in for me, but I look forward to returning to this again soon! :veelove:

And we’ll be looking forward to it! Thanks again for the review!” ^^

@Chibi Pika
Alrighty, picking up where I left off with everyone's paths converging on Pioppo! Man, Hess is trying so hard to rally the crew and everyone's just... having no reaction lol. C'monn your rescued crewmates just returned and it's been proven that there's no ghosts, the rest of you oughta be itching for payback. Ah well, at least the rum got them goin' as usual. :P

What can I say? He knows his underlings well. :mewlulz:

Honestly I’m in favor of the Iron Fleet raiding the island after everything we've learned so far. And hell yeah to Guardia hurling the club at Valter. I think Team Traveler should make a run for it when the pirates are fighting the villagers. :V Buuuut cutting a deal to notify their crew works too. (I knoowww, I know they can’t leave without the ledger. :P)

Cernun: “Wait, you’re really that mad at us-?”
Pleo: “You were going to keep my friends here forever!
:thinkgia:


Aaaand it's time for Team Traveler to face off against... actually, I'm not sure what's a good way to refer to the Alvise trio. In my notes I called them the dork squad because they've gotten clowned on a bunch in the past. :mewlulz: They're definitely not getting clowned on here, though! That was a pretty intense battle, showing both that these three can be a bona fide threat, while also showing that Team Traveler aren't pushovers anymore, either. And hey! Long-awaited Nida evolution after drawing her all those years ago.

Alvise: “Wh-Wha-?! Dork Squad?! What’s that supposed to mean?! We would’ve won that battle if it wasn’t for that dumb luck at the end-!”
:AlviseShocked:


Ohhh boy Elty's finally gonna come clean to his crew. Oof, there’s no way this’ll go well for him, and judging by Hess's reaction... yeah, I think he’s made a mistake. ><;

Elty: “Yeah, I’m starting to realize that.”
:eltyscared:


Wow it feels like everyone knows Trizano these days, the bird really gets around. And the rest of the crew arrives! Time for an all-out brawl. One in which I was very surprised to see Kichiro of all mon practically being the MVP, wow. It was fun to see Elty and Guardia tag team up to take down Hess. I'm pretty impressed with Ander too, both with him taking a major role in the battle and also being the first mon to reach out to Cernun there at the end, which was unexpected.

Phew, that was a long one! Looks like I'm getting pretty close to the end of the Pioppo arc, judging by the chapter headers. Until next time~!

And thanks for the review! It was a lot of fun to read, and we’ll be looking forward to whenever you come back for more of this story. ^^

@Ambyssin
Ah, yes, so we're still not out of the woods of playing Pleoball. Though I can't help but suspect that this is not going to end with Valan swooping in to take Pleo to the Empire. We kind of already had that one happen and it's way too late into the fic for that.

Yeah, that’s not happening. There’s one more change of hands left in this story for Pleo, and it won’t be to Valan.

And, as we all know, the first mates in this fic are always right. So, I'll just pencil in some sort of inevitable squabble amidst the team of enemies. But who knows when it'll be.

Hold onto those thoughts there.

I expect the former would have a harsher reaction to the latter. Since most of what we've seen if the latter suggests, well, she's an airhead (appropriate because flying-type). Maybe. It has been literal years since I've read her.

That sounds about right, yes.

Aha! At long last, we have a motive behind this guy's actions. Wanting to rebuild the old world or what have you. In some ways, it's a reverse Lysandre. Which, uh, yeah, I guess that's fitting for a fic that started waaaaaaay back in Gen VI and around the time of Zygarde shenanigans being a thing in the anime, I suppose that tracks!

Yeah, we’ve been looking forward to being able to deal more frontally with what the main driver behind Team Elilan was, since it’ll figure pretty prominently through the rest of the story.

A looplet to trigger Power Construct at full strength? Or perhaps one that will enable Mega Evolution? Or maybe it's both…

[...]

Let Kline have a gun! 👏

Hold onto these thoughts as well. :V

Huh. I'm unsure if this was hinted at and I forgot or if this just a fresh reveal. I suppose in some respects, now it makes sense why he turned to Bunsen during his desperation. Birds of a feather there.

This has been hinted at for a while, yeah. Elilan has had some not-so-subtle contempt for Darzin being an ex-feral for a while now.

That's the motive, huh? His actions are pretty wild to get that to happen, considering he put islanders under the Company heel to accomplish this. Surely that meant messing with other mystery dungeons for the Company's benefit? 🤔

Yes, but it wasn’t his home Mystery Dungeon and didn’t go anywhere near as far, so not his problem there.

Interesting thing to offscreen here. Perhaps we're going to see Hess' side of it next chapter. But for a fic that's leaned on the side of trying to show at least a little bit of everything, this feels like a surprising thing to mostly skim over. Would've really sold the horrors of Nyxem's lab setting to see this stuff in action. Maybe it's offscreened because it's a bit too far for this fic's age rating?

Nah, we’ll see this happening onscreen a couple times, which we felt merited focusing on the moments that were a bit more spectacular. You’ll get to see one of them today.

Interesting chapter here. Very meaty reveals here. I will say that, in hindsight, I really do wish there had been some more hints dropped here and there about things like Elilan's motivations, Trizano's connection to Hess, and Darzin's origins as an ex-feral. And maybe there were hints and I was forgetting them? Was Hess' brother from the island with Xerneas? And the group had talked to him about it? I'm not sure. That's partly the perils of such massive chapters with large gaps between uploads. There are a lot of moving pieces and more reminders are needed to hint at that stuff.

The reveals themselves are interesting, though. I'm hoping they're tidbits that are laying the groundwork for Hess and Darzin to stand against Elilan and the Company at large. Admittedly I'm not entirely sure how these Company dynamics are going to work with the time we have left. I still believe the finale will revolve around Elilan and freeing Micky (or all of Zygarde) from corruptive control, which would necessitate that the remainder of the Company personnel getting knocked off their collective peg at some point. Maybe they side with Team Traveler to some extend as a result? I dunno.

Yeah, in retrospect, I suppose we could’ve given a few more reminders/hints sprinkled in, but glad to hear that you liked the reveals this chapter. No comment on the finale though, since that’s something that will come along in due time.

Oops. Long(ish) tangent there. Hess having a reunion with family seems unlikely to happen during the current fic, at the very least. And Darzin's fellow dungeon 'mon are just sort of faceless. Unless we've stumbled upon some and we don't know it or I forgot.

You’ve met at least one of said dungeon ‘mons in the past. You’ll get a reminder of who said ‘mon is in today’s chapter.

Getting to see Elilan's motivations at last is also good. It stands as a stark contrast to the Company and Empire and is a much more solid connection to the lore in the background here. Given his plans revolve around Zygarde, it reminds me of Lysandre in some ways. The irony that this is coming up when the guy is actually relevant again.

Yeah, it’s a bit of a happy coincidence that the franchise wound up circling back to Gen 6 and its themes lately. Not that we’re complaining on our front.

I though the negotiation scene at the end of the chapter was pretty good. Didn't expect it to go tremendously but it looks like there's a tentative agreement. Even if I'm now even less confident this makeshift ragtag fleet will hold it together without descending into fighting amongst itself than I was at the start of the chapter. I, uh, am still hoping I'm wrong about that. Because there a lot of moving pieces here and I don't want things to get too ridiculous when the fighting breaks out at Nagrobek.

Whelp, something for you to keep an eye on, I suppose. But thanks for the review. It was a lot of fun to read, and we’re glad to hear that you seemed to be enjoying this past chapter.

@Navar
Speaking of those pirates, the perspective shifts right back to them! Alright, reasonable enough. So, when it comes to them, I think they have a good plan. I'm not entirely sure why I'm rooting for what are definitely the evil guys here, but... I sorta am? I mean, Hess isn't that bad, if he's not willing to steal eggs, that is. Though I guess the bar might be too low in this case to the point he seems like a reasonable guy. He still isn't beating his underlings, though intimidation is a different story. It's interesting that there are lines he won't cross, but that doesn't mean he's not getting close to them. It's a neat detail, intentional or not.

Yeah, there’s a certain type of villain that winds up wrapping around to being endearing from being a bit bumbling and ineffectual, which was what we were aiming for with the Iron Fleet at large. Glad to hear that it came through.

This celebration is fun. Like, it seems fun. I almost wanna go there myself, for some reason. Not entirely sure why, but hey, everyone seems to be having fun in there. I think what's most interesting for this part of the story is building up to more of the world. For example, what this festivity represents to begin with. Keeping up hope is a daunting task, especially when you consider the state of the world. But I also think that the fact they're still trying despite everything is commendable. The celebration is part of that, it seems. Which is also a little bit sad since I think the pirates are gonna show up soon. So this little party is momentary, but for the reason of the pirates being around.

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I think it's funny that after all this planning, Hess was stopped by fireworks. I'm not sure why that's amusing to me, it just kinda is. But hey, nothing wrong with that, I think. At the end of the day, despite the threat of an actual pirate raid, nothing particularly wrong happened. Y'know, all things considered, the folks living there are pretty lucky :p

Mostly, anyways, since the events of this special wound up inadvertently setting up the events of the second episode of Fledglings into motion.

Happy to see the team working together. Though, yeah, Elty is mostly doing this out of necessity rather than the goodness of his heart, but I'm guessing that his redemption arc (TM) is gonna come around soon. And really, that's gonna be fun. So far, he does have a good chemistry with both Nida and Pleo. Each character here has something to contribute to the scene, and honestly I like that. They have a role to play, but they're also all working together. That's the big thing here, I guess. The fact they're all working for the same goal. Which... I admittedly don't remember because it's been a while. Anyway, I imagine these guys do need a break after travelling for so long. They deserve it, but, hm, I'm still guessing that the break will be cut short eventually. Here's hoping it all goes by smoothly~

I mean, you’re not wrong about Elty’s ultimate trajectory, but he’s not quite ready to dive into it just yet. You’ll see what it’s like as you continue reading along.

Hmmm. Okay, the gang is separating here, and it's now that I realize that Elty's only helping them because Nida has his bag. I didn't remember that... my bad. Again, everyone and their mother seems to be on this island. At least we'll get to see Hess again, right? So, I'm glad that Elty isn't being tossed aside like he's nothing for the failure earlier. I was sorta expecting this to be the case, but nope, it isn't. Good, good.

I mean, he’s not going anywhere fast from the story considering how big of a billing he’s getting on the banner art.
:bleplithe:


Oh boy. This next part of the chapter is full of stuff, and therefore there's a lot I should comment on. For starters, Lyn. So far he was set up as this big, important guy that's bringing a lot of trouble for our protagonists, and for a good reason. He's a strong guy, and he makes that abudantly clear to everyone around him. Readers included as well. Then it's told that he's not even the leader of the company; there's people higher than him, above him in the chain of command. The administrators, that is. Which then brings us to this particular scene. Lyn had a mission, he failed, and now he has to tell that to his bosses. Naturally, anyone would be pissed off that a subordinate failed as much as Lyn did. So the tension on the scene is not only expected, but warranted as well. It's the kind of thing that really makes you nervous, especially with how the prose is written. Though, on the bright side, Lyn still has a chance to make amends. I know he's a villain and all, but I almost feel sorry for the guy. I guess he is a pretty big deal to the point that his bosses can't afford to fire him or... I dunno, execute him or something. Rough stuff. I think the funniest part is that right after this incredibly tense scene you have the three goofball pirates from the start trying their best to make it seem like they weren't eavesdropping on this conversation. Heh, it's kinda amusing to me, but I dunno why. Still, I quite like it.

Glad to hear that you liked them, since you’ll be seeing both those Company higher-ups and those goofball pirates a lot more in this story.

Y'know, I was half expecting Elty to make his friends get into trouble a little bit earlier than this. But, hm, it happened in the end. And while the trouble was just them not paying a bill, I still think it took him a lot of time to get to this point. So, good job, Elty? I'm not sure if I can say this, but well, it's whatever. The good news in their case is that someone did bail them out. Oh hey, a Marshtomp! I know he's probably a side character but still, always nice to see a Marshtomp in one of these stories. For some reason they're rare... anyway, more importantly, these people are from Tromba! Or... descendants of them, at least. So this is less about the team being goodhearted and helping people, and more like a trade. If they have money to pay for food, then what kind of help do they need? Curious, curious. But this is also the last part of the chapter, and well, there's not much else that Nida and co can do in this situation. It's like they were forced into helping these people out. I mean, it could be worse, they could be washing dishes for the entire night! Or more! And they're still on a clock. So, overall, they were dealt a losing hand regardless of what option they pick. But... I guess helping these guys out probably won't be too much trouble.

Surely not.

Well, something for you to look forward to in the future. Though thanks for the review. It was a lot of fun to read it, and if and when you come back for more, we’ll be looking forward to reading your impressions again. ^^

And with that, it’s about time to get back into the story. Though given that there’s a fairly clean divide between what the different groups of characters have been up to so far in this episode, and what they’ll be doing in the upcoming chapters, Virgil and I decided to take a page from the arcs back in Tromba and call the episode here. It should hopefully allow us to get through the immediately following plot events in smaller and more frequent (relative to the past few chapters) updates.

Though anyhow, let’s get right to things and send this episode off:
 
Chapter 108: Testing the Waters New

Virgil134

PMD Writer
Partners
  1. sylveon
  2. weavile
  3. kommo-o
  4. noivern
  5. mothim
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Elilan opted to spend the last stretch of his journey to Nagrobek with Sorge on the deck of his ironclad. He watched as the buildings of Dulefield Town started coming into view over the horizon under the afternoon sun… along with the prison and his administrative complex looming off in the background.

Dulefield was still the backwater town that it had been when his tenure began, with the same stubborn Pokémon that lived in it. It never failed to surprise him how the villagers clung to that outdated and obsolete relic of a town, instead of moving to more dignified existences on the other Company islands. But even so—as they got closer, Elilan noticed something was different that day:

All along Dulefield Town's harbor, the docks were unusually crowded with strange ships. There were far too many of them for them to be merchant vessels, and their hulls didn't look particularly well-equipped to carry ore. As they neared the town, he saw that most of the ships looked visibly damaged, like a schooner whose hull was visibly held together with ice plugs. Sorge blinked at the sight for a moment, before shaking his head with a low harrumph.

"Looks like Ketu wasn't kidding when he said that our personnel would be kept busy with the aftermath of Lyn's battle to capture Pleo."

"Well, I'd certainly hope so when Lyn sailed off for it with a fleet of five ships," Elilan scoffed. "If that Samurott couldn't even manage to come out victorious with such resources, even Inler would've had to fire him on the spot."

Elilan rested an elbow on the railing and leaned his head against the back of his claw. He looked out at the ramshackle town on the coast as they sailed past it, before giving a frowning sigh.

"But the Board has made its choice, and there's nothing to be gained by challenging it right now… Frontally, anyways," the Zoroark said. "It's not as if we haven't worked around worse setbacks in the past. Besides, there's more immediate concerns we need to tend to."

The town drifted further and further to the right as the ironclad sailed along. Elilan and Sorge watched their surroundings go by as the ship rounded the island, until they were looking up the island's Administrative Complex and its attached prison at the top of a sheer cliff face. Their destination lay at the same cliff's bottom, just west of the buildings far above—the local garrison. It was a collection of buildings and docks built along a narrow strip of land wedged between the cliffs and the sea, anchored by a stone fortress three levels tall at the center. It was the nigh-impregnable final line of defense to the cliff it was built into and the tunnel passages up to the complex above, with narrow slit-like windows from which its defenders could throw covering attacks or fire cannon shots..

Elilan scanned the docks as his ironclad pulled in at the dock's central pier. All around them were ships in Company lavenders moored, barring one exception with blue sails, each bearing a black circle quartered by tilted cross. Off to the right of the sea fort, there was a grated channel that had been cut to let aquatic prisoners be taken to the pens in the sea caves at the base of the cliff. Although there weren't any prisoners to be seen at that moment, there were guards going about firmly at attention on land, in the water, and in the air above.

A sign this place was being watched over by orderly and loyal defenders. Just as things should be.

The Zoroark's ears flicked at a loud clatter along the pier: a sign the gangplank was being lowered. Elilan felt a gentle nudge at his shoulder, before looking up at Sorge peering down at him.

"We should get going, Administrator," he said. "We've got a busy evening ahead of us."

And indeed they did. Elilan left his place at the railing and made his way for the gangplank alongside his Kommo-o subordinate. As they descended down to the docks, they saw there was already a party of guards present—evidently having received notice from the messenger he dispatched of their impending arrival. At their fore, there was a Trevenant with a Third-Rank scarf who kept his eye on them the entire time—Betulo, his Commander and right hand 'mon. He waited for them to reach the pier, before moving forward, nodding as his face took on a warm expression.

"Welcome back, Administrator," the Trevenant said. "And pleasure seeing you again, Sorge. It really has been far too long since you were last here."

"Indeed it has. You know how it is in the field, under cover," the Kommo-o replied, idly waving a claw. "While it wasn't the worst job, babysitting the dozenth Pokémon through a Mystery Dungeon while making no progress on our real mission got old after a while."

Sorge trailed off briefly, before looking at the ships docked at the garrison's piers. He let his attention linger on them briefly, before turning back to Betulo with a puzzled quirk of his brow.

"I take it that you've been busy with work in the prison lately?"

"Quite," Betulo replied. "We haven't had to process this many prisoners at once since the big raid seven years ago."

The Trevenant paused, as he turned his gaze to Elilan, his expression having suddenly taken a visibly serious turn.

"We did some initial processing to separate out the weak links and the Pokémon that Nyxem would have an immediate use for, but with how overcrowded the cellblocks are right now, we'll need to thin their ranks a bit more over the coming month," Betulo insisted. "I don't like the way those scum are spreading my guards thin and Torn Outpost always needs more bodies to keep it working."

Elilan blinked, before cocking a brow in reply.

"I'll admit, I wasn't expecting to hear that," the Zoroark said. "The Board's more or less approved everything I asked for to expand and better equip the local garrison for the last seven years. Why the sudden doubt in their ability to handle some more prisoners than normal?"

"Because the Director went and surprised me just yesterday with a summons for a third of the ships posted here to sail off and help shore up defenses on Vollezee," Betulo harrumphed, folding his arms. "I naturally did what I could to make sure we held onto as much of our own personnel as possible, but quality can only compensate so much for losing that sort of headcount."

There was a brief clattering noise as Sorge tensed up slightly. At his side, Elilan's face visibly fell, but he gave no response beyond a low sigh before speaking again.

"… Why am I not surprised?" the Zoroark grumbled. "Even if Inler normally isn't the type to just go and bluntly sideline me, I-"

"Oh, I already heard and started to try and rectify that by bringing in additional Pokémon from our mercenaries to fill in for them. If we're going to make do with reduced headcount, they might as well be more loyal and dependable," Betulo interrupted. "The procurement paperwork to smooth things over with the Finance Department and get them shipped in from Vollezee is on your desk already. It's just waiting for your signature."

The Trevenant turned and raised a claw off at a barque off at the docks where a set of lavender sails were being hoisted. Down at the docks, some teal-colored sails were lying wadded up by the gangplank and being carried off by workers. Elilan and Sorge both paused at the sight, as they looked back at Betulo, who nodded with a satisfied grunt.

"That's why that hunk of junk and the ones you saw in port at Dulefield Town on the way in are still floating," he explained. "They're not pretty, but they're functional. By the time the Finance Department signs off on the contract, they'll be repaired, cleaned, and ready for whoever our Canalhouse office sends over."

Elilan let his gaze linger on his Commander for a moment, as the Zoroark's mouth curled up into a small smile.

"You really are a lifesaver sometimes, Betulo–"

"Grr! Unhand me! Now!"

Sorge, Betulo, and the guards on the pier jolted up at attention and braced themselves. Elilan flattened his ears and turned around after them. From the growling and thumping, he already knew who it was:

Sure enough, coming down the gangplank getting herded along by Junius and a small party of other guards, was Darzin, thrashing and flailing as uselessly as ever with his limbs chained behind him. Elilan, Betulo, and Sorge watched as the procession made its way up to them, the Dragonite glaring at them the entire time and snarling from under his muzzle.

It impressed exactly nobody present. Sorge didn't even bother to hide the way he rolled his eyes, while Elilan barely gave the Dragonite a passing look. For his part, Betulo glanced over, crossing his arms with a bemused chuckle.

"I see that nuisance on the Board's finally been taken care of," the Trevenant said. "I'll admit, I was expecting him to wind up slinking off into some sea trench after getting fired."

Elilan and the others turned their heads after hearing the sound of Darzin's seething, as they turned and saw the Dragonite thrashing and bucking under the grasp of the guards leading him along… or attempting to, anyways. From the way he'd managed to shove an Abomasnow to the pier, it was already obvious that things were going to drag on without someone stepping in.

The Zoroark frowned, and started pacing over, flashing the claws on his left paw with a grumbling sigh.

"You really are a slow learner, aren't you, Darzin?"

Dark magenta light gathered around Elilan's claw, before coalescing into an orb that he suddenly dug his claws into. It burst forward into a shockwave that struck Darzin's stomach. The Dragonite roared in pain from the Night Daze as his strength visibly flagged and dark spots began to fill his vision. The Dragon-Type toppled forward, prompting the guards around him to swiftly pin him against the ground.

The Zoroark took the last few paces forward, as Darzin struggled against his captors' grasp and glared up at him. Elilan paid it no mind, other than to narrow his eyes into a sharp scowl and bare his own fangs back.

"As I told you back on the ship, I control you now," the Zoroark growled. "Clearly I need to get that message across to you in blunter terms."

Elilan looked over at Junius helping to wrangle Darzin, before motioning up at the Dragonite's wings with a dispassionate harrumph.

"Junius, have his wings perforated before he reaches the cellblocks. If he still hasn't learned his lesson after those wounds close, remove them."

The Marowak nodded back as a malicious grin started to settle on his face. All of a sudden, Darzin's defiant demeanor changed, as his eyes visibly widened and his voice came out in a startled cry.

"Wait, what-?!"

Junius and the other guards suddenly pressed the side of Darzin's head against the pier as a Persian stepped forward and cast a set of rings of light at his face. The Dragonite flailed and tried to get back up, only for his movements to grow more lethargic and his voice to start slurring. And almost as quickly as it began, Darzin's resistance was over, with the Dragonite lying sprawled out and dozing on the pier.

Junius and the others dragged the dragon up and carried on, Betulo watching as the party of guards left for the garrison complex. The Trevenant let his gaze linger after them for a moment with a darkened glare, before turning back to Elilan and giving an idle brush at his shoulder.

"As for our earlier conversation… I suppose this means the Board's gone through with making Lyn the new Administrator."

"Unfortunately, yes," Elilan replied. "Though let's take this inside, since we clearly both have a lot to catch up on."

Elilan turned and began to make his way down the docks, as Sorge followed after him. Betulo waited for Elilan to pass before he joined along at Sorge's side and turned his attention to the Kommo-o.

"By the way, I've already told the teleporters to prepare for your arrival, Sorge. Just let them know whenever you're ready to head to Torn Outpost," the Trevenant said. "I'm sure Nyxem's looking forward to seeing you again."

"Actually, I need Sorge to stay for now, Betulo," Elilan cut in.

The Trevenant blinked briefly, shooting an askew glance as the Zoroark looked back with a knowing smirk.

"There's a few Pokémon under your care right now that I'd like for us to sit down with."



Salvini quietly gulped down water from a small clay cup and set it down against the table with a quiet tak. She was back in the living room of that ratty little apartment in Drieboog her uncle used to own, the same one she'd gotten reacquainted with since being reassigned to Vollezee. It was the most crowded it'd been in years right now thanks to Payak and Phyllis both being here with her. A part of her was kicking herself over not having just pooled her money with Osmund to get a proper door for the place, even if she hadn't expected the place to need one until just a couple weeks ago.

Phyllis and Payak were sitting at the other end of the table, stealing impatient glances at the cut-up cloth strips in the doorway, before the Leafeon uneasily pawed at a cup on the table.

"What's taking Hertsog so long?" Phyllis murmured. "Did something happen?"

"Yeah, I thought you said that he asked for us to meet here at your place the moment we got off work," Payak said.

Salvini pawed at her arm as a squirming feeling came over her gut. Even if it wasn't that uncommon for Hertsog to linger a bit after work, it wasn't like him to show up late for meetings that he himself had called. Let alone by almost half an hour.

… Had something happened to him? Salvini hadn't thought anyone had been listening in on them at the Academy, but if the past few days had taught her anything, it was that she didn't know Canalhouse City anywhere as well as she thought that she did.

The Grovyle quietly drummed her claws against the table, before getting up from her seat and turning for the doorway.

"I think one of us should go back to the Academy," she said. "Maybe it's nothing, but-"

The words died in her mouth as she heard hurried footsteps down the hallway. Salvini reflexively stiffened up and saw Payak and Phyllis do much, as the footsteps came closer before abruptly stopping in front of the doorway.

"Salvini, are you there?"

A familiar voice came from the threshold as the cloth over the doorway parted and there, poking his head in was none other than Hertsog. Salvini sighed in relief at the sight of the Mienshao, glad that those fears racing in her head hadn't come to pass.

"… We were starting to get worried," she said. "Come on in."

Hertsog slipped past the cloth over the doorway and made his way over to the others at the low-slung table. The entire time, the Mienshao's gait looked stiff and tense, as if he'd come over in a rush. Salvini and the others traded uneasy glances with each other, before the Grovyle shot Hertsog a worried look.

"Hertsog, is everything alright?" Salvini asked.

"I'm fine. Personally, at least," the Mienshao said. "I just had a bit of trouble finding the right building since they all look fairly similar on this block."

That… was good, at least? Though something about Hertsog's reaction wasn't adding up. Phyllis hesitated and swayed her tail warily, before giving him an askew glance.

"And…? Something's obviously going on from the way you're acting right now, Hertsog," the Leafeon said. "What's going on?"

Hertsog quietly sucked in a breath and had a hesitance about him that gave Salvini a sinking feeling. The Mienshao hung his head, and shook it with a low murmur.

"I just wish that I had better news to give right now," he explained. "I found out where Pleo's friends are currently. They were captured in a battle at sea and sent to Nagrobek."

The Mienshao's words seemed to suck the air out of the room. There was a shared grimace among the other Pokémon at the table, before Phyllis finally broke the silence with a startled gasp.

"Wait, they actually sent them to Nagrobek of all places?!" the Leafeon asked.

"Hertsog, are you sure that's where they are?" Payak pressed.

"That's what I was told, yes," the Mienshao insisted. "I went and asked some old acquaintances who were pulled for that sudden deployment earlier this week. I don't have any reason to believe that they're lying to me."

The gathering about the table fell deathly silent as Salvini and her teammates grimaced one after the other. Nagrobek was a forlorn island that was known for two things: being the site of the Company's tin mines… and of a brutal prison that even the pirates who were bold enough to attack Mengir were afraid of. Had Lyn really sent a bunch of kids to a place like that? Just how long could they possibly last there?

Hertsog clearly was worried about it himself from the troubled expression on his face. He averted his gaze, before the Mienshao continued on with a low sigh.

"As harsh as it is, I suppose this outcome makes a sort of sense. I take it everyone has heard by now of Commissioner Lyn's recent promotion to the Board?" he said. "The official story among our ranks is that Pleo was being held by pirates and that he fought off a large pirate fleet in order to 'rescue' him. I don't know why or how they got there, but whatever Lyn really believed about Pleo's friends, his subordinates would've likely just thrown them in with the others as an afterthought."

Salvini blanched and shrank back, as she saw her teammates reacting not all that differently from herself. She knew that they had wanted to help Pleo and his friends, but… just what on earth could they even do about that?

She looked back at the Mienshao, where much to her curiosity, Hertsog's face had taken a serious turn and a determined glint had settled over his eyes.

"I know that this wasn't what we were hoping to hear, but at least for myself, it didn't really change anything about my plans," he continued. "I just wanted to make sure that was still the same for everyone else here. Were you all still planning to accompany me?"

"Razbira se, che da!" Payak chittered. "We're not just leaving a bunch of kids to rot there of all places!"

Phyllis and Salvini both nodded along with Payak, only for the Leafeon of the pair to hesitate briefly, before giving a puzzled tilt of her head at her Mienshao companion.

"I think that we all want to do something, Hertsog," Phyllis murmured. "But just what are we supposed to do about Lugia's friends being on Nagrobek?"

"We reach out to the prison's warden and convince him that Pleo's friends aren't supposed to be there," Hertsog explained. "That Lyn's sentencing for them was wildly inappropriate for dealing with a bunch of youngsters and their guardians, and that they should be dealt with back on their home islands."

Salvini, Phyllis, and Payak traded dubious glances with one another. Yes, there was some logic to Hertsog's plan, and maybe it'd work on some Pokémon in the Company… but with the sorts of Pokémon that were posted to watch over the most-guarded prison in Company waters…?

"… I don't know how that one is going to go over with them," Salvini said, shaking her head. "Even if their home island wasn't Tromba of all places, the prison on Nagrobek doesn't exactly have a reputation for being quick to let 'mons go…"

"Then we tell them that they're wanted for a whole list of charges back on Mengir that we'll tailor accordingly beforehand," Hertsog insisted. "As Captain of the Guards, it is part of my duties to see that they're tried on Mengir for that, which would involve them being transferred over to stand trial."

Salvini blinked as she saw that Hertsog's own muzzle had curled and he'd quietly set his teeth on edge. He averted his gaze, giving an uneasy paw at his shoulder.

"I… admittedly am pessimistic about my chances of talking Administrator Zorn into letting them go entirely," he admitted. "But since I'll be restored to my position as Mengir's Captain of the Guards, I'd certainly have leeway over shaping what their sentencing looked like in practical terms. And if they wound up 'escaping' on Mengir because I underestimated how determined they were to get away, well…"

Hertsog trailed off briefly as the others in the room stared at him wordlessly. After a moment, Payak's mouthparts began curling up into a knowing smile, as the Ariados let out a low chuckle.

"Oh, so that's where Salvini's been getting all those terrible ideas from over the last month, huh?" Payak said.

Hertsog stiffened up and flusteredly twitched his whiskers. The moment passed almost as soon as it came, before the Mienshao shook his head back in reply.

"I don't know what you're talking about there, Payak. But if you three are serious about coming along, pack your things and get your share of the money we agreed on for buying passage and lodging on Nagrobek. Tonight."

"Wait, tonight?" Phyllis asked, blinking. "Hertsog, isn't that moving a bit fast?"

"It is, but the next ship to Nagrobek sails off tomorrow morning," Hertsog explained. "Unless we somehow have the extra money to hire someone to swim us directly to the island, it'll likely be our only chance to make it to Nagrobek without being away from Mengir long enough to be reported as being absent without leave."

Hertsog folded his arms and turned his eyes to them, their red irises and his muzzle locked into a firm, serious expression.

"I know that I've been asking a lot from you all in these past couple days," he said. "But if there's anything about this that makes you uneasy—anything at all that would make you change your minds about coming along—please, tell me now."

Salvini studied the reactions of her teammates, when she noticed Payak looking away and seemingly wavering. The Ariados paused and lingered, before nodding back from across the table.

"I can make it," Payak said. "I'll have to take care of some stuff this evening, but I'll just make up the lost sleep on the ship."

He scuttled off past the cloth strips and into the hallway. Phyllis began to make her way after him, stopping and lingering by Hertsog as she passed. She studied the Mienshao's face for a moment, and fidgeted with her paws before finally speaking up.

"I still want to come myself. I… just hope we're doing the right thing here," the Leafeon murmured. "I don't know what I'd do if I got expelled from the Company…"

Phyllis turned and left herself, her footsteps pattering down the hall until it was just Salvini and Hertsog in the apartment. Salvini hesitated and let her gaze drift down to the floor, as the Mienshao sidled up to her with a worried frown.

"Salvini, is something wrong?"

The Grovyle faltered for a moment. She knew that she'd told Hertsog that she wanted to help him, and it wasn't as if she didn't want to help Pleo's friends, but…"

"Will we really be able to make any difference for them?"

Salvini looked up at the Mienshao expectantly. She hoped that he'd be able to say something about how things would work out in the end, but his own face didn't look that different from her own. He seemed to weigh his words briefly, before shaking his head with a low sigh.

"I wish that I had an answer to that question, but I honestly don't know," Hertsog said. "Whatever happens, we have to try to make a difference. And I'm willing to go as far as the rest of you—no matter what happens."

A part of Salvini thought that the words weren't all that reassuring. Their own circumstances in the Company were already precarious at the moment, and it wasn't hard to imagine ways that them attempting to get Team Traveller out of that prison could end poorly.

But at the same time, they'd be facing it as friends. Together.

The Grovyle's features eased, as a small smile worked its way over her face.

"That's good enough for me, I suppose," she replied. "I'll hold you to it."



Hess' breaths came out in ragged pants as his heart raced in his chest. He'd barely been able to follow where he'd been going since getting dragged out of his cell in the midst of his panic, and the journey since then had gone by in a disorienting blur of dimly lit hallways. Before he knew it, the Blaziken and the other guards shoving him along had brought him to yet another metal door. They opened it, revealing a small, windowless chamber lit up by torches with a couple wooden benches that looked like obviously recent additions from their construction. As he marched in, he saw its walls were made of stonework and sections that were obviously much older and made of pitted concrete, along with a metal grate that led off to some space that was too dim to make out.

Hess tried to buck his captors and run, only for the Blaziken to drive a punch deep into his gut. He hollered in pain and stumbled forward wheezing for air as the metal door closed behind him. That accursed chiming hum rang out just in front of him, where sure enough, there was Nyxem, floating towards him with that creepy perpetually upbeat demeanor of his.

"There's no need to be so nervous, Hess," the Porygon-Z chimed. "I have something of yours that you'd likely appreciate."

Nyxem's eyes suddenly came aglow with a bluish hue as he floated a gray, spherical stone with a helical swirl just in front of him. Hess' eyes widened as he saw the stone and its pattern, and realized that it was none other than…

"Ah! My lucky charm!"

The Aggron threw a claw forward and tried to grab at it, only for Nyxem to suddenly jerk it out of reach. The guards with him summarily wrenched Hess' arms back behind him, duly ignoring the Steel-Type's protests as Nyxem floated up.

"Ah-ah-ah… I didn't bring this back just for you to do as you pleased with it," the Porygon-Z said. "Though I must know… how did you ever get this in the first place?"

Hess squirmed in place and bit back his tongue, only to waver after the guards trained sharp scowls at him.

"I-I got it back when I was younger," the Aggron stammered. "The 'mon who sold it to me said that as long as I have it, it would bring me good luck and I'll always be able to get back to whatever place I call home."

"… Someone just happened to sell you a corresponding Mega Stone?" Nyxem questioned. "Who exactly sold it to you? What sort of Pokémon were they?"

"Uh… I-I don't remember?" Hess stammered. "It was just some travelling merchant and it happened years ago…"

There was a moment's silence between the two as Nyxem studied Hess carefully, before the Porygon-Z let out a low hum.

"Curious. You don't seem to be lying," he said. "But I suppose this is something we can pry into later. There was a practical reason why I let you have your 'lucky charm' back beyond your personal superstitions. Since it can do so, so much more."

Faint footsteps approached as the Porygon-Z swiveled his head, and idly fidgeted his arms in place..

"Though I believe that the most efficient way of explaining will be through a live demonstration."

Hess turned his head back and looked towards the approaching presence, and saw a Smeargle carrying a small metal case. The dog popped open a latch on the case, revealing a band made of golden-colored metal inside that was resting on soft padding. Nyxem floated Hess' lucky charm over to the Smeargle, who pressed it down into a circular notch with a faint click. After the Smeargle finished, he brought the band over towards Hess' right claw, before roughly hiking it up the Aggron's arm until it started chafing against his scales. Hess squirmed and tried to grab at the band to loosen it, when there was a clattering noise from up ahead. The grate suddenly started retracting up past the ceiling, as he guards with Hess suddenly pushed him forward.

They herded him along and the moment they passed the threshold, they sharply shoved him forward. He stumbled forward into some sort of large chamber with crude, wooden chandeliers holding torches hanging from the ceiling above. The space all around was flat and hemmed in by walls, with the one on the right having that same sigil with the five falling stars he saw when first coming to Torn Outpost. Off on the left, there was what looked like a pitted and scarred ramp going along the left side. It ascended at an angle much like a ramp, almost like seats set up along a battlefield. High up off towards the top of the ramp, there was a Sigilyph and Archeops posted in front of a small enclosure that overlooked the entire chamber. It seemed to be made of concrete and rusted metal with rectangular gaps that looked almost like they used to be windows of some sort.

"Wh-What the…?" Hess gulped. "What is this place-?"

"Looks like your test today's going to be easy, Heracross," a ghostly voice sneered. "With a type advantage like this, you ought to be able to put this 'mon down quick."

The Aggron looked over towards where the voices were coming from. Off at a similar-looking entrance at the other end of the chamber, there was a Heracross being led along by a party of guards headed by an Aegislash. The beetle's body was flecked in scars and his expression was sullen and unyielding, but he didn't do anything to challenge his captors beyond leveling a piercing glare back at the Aegislash.

"Hrmph, how about you weasels put your own carapaces on the line for once? See how quick I can take down 'mons then."

The Heracross punched his claws together, as it slowly dawned on Hess that beyond a brief moment glowering at the guards, the Bug-Type's attention was trained squarely on him. He backed away uneasily, before turning to Nyxem with an uneasy stammer.

"Wh-What's he talking about?"

"He's referring to the combat experiment of course. You and Samson will be fighting each other today," Nyxem explained. "He used to be an Imperial spy who wanted to see what went on below Nagrobek's prison. In the end, he got what he wanted… just not the way he was expecting."

Hess' eyes widened as soon as the Porygon-Z finished speaking. He spluttered out of surprise, before gathering his bearings together enough to cry out in protest.

"Th-This is insane! Wh-What do you expect me to do against a Fighting-Type?!" the Aggron exclaimed. "And you can't just force us to fight like this! I don't even know this 'mon!"

Nyxem let out a weirdly self-satisfied chime in response and tilted his head up. Hess froze, as much to his alarm, the strange Porygon's face suddenly took on an eerie look that made Hess' scales crawl.

"We'll see about that. Samson said much the same before his first experiment."

There was a flash of light, as Nyxem blipped away. He teleported up into the viewing enclosure that looked out over the entire chamber as the guards on both ends started filing out and the metal grates over the entrances slammed shut. Nyxem settled in and noted a waiting Kadabra in the room, prompting the Porygon-Z to raise an arm with a low chime.

"Ada, kindly fetch the instruments for today's experiment," he instructed. "I'm going to begin the Frism recording and I'd like to start our test suite as soon as possible."

The Kadabra nodded and headed off for a set of shelves in the background as Nyxem tugged a box out from beneath the counter with an unseen force. He set it on top, before telekinetically prying the lid open. Cold mist came from it, as he reached for an icy object that vaguely resembled a jar inside it. He gave a firm tap at the side of the vessel as a faint ping lingered in the air. He briefly looked down and saw Hess squeaking and nervously raising his claws for a stop on the battlefield as the Heracross approached, before the Porygon-Z floated the icy vessel up to his beak.

"Project Alkahest, Personal Log Timestamp 23520337385. A new batch of prisoners came in two days ago, and we received quite the lucky break from it," Nyxem said. "Not only did one of those so-called Immortals arrive in the shipment, but there was even an Aggron who came with what appears to be an Aggronite. Today's experiment will be focusing on the latter and his potential to Mega Evolve."

The Kadabra came back pushing a wheeled cart holding a large metal chest that had been hooked up to an empty canister, along with a pair of bracelets fashioned from gold-colored metal that rested on its top. Each bracelet had a black band and green hexagons on their surface—the needed tools for today's experiment.

The Kadabra slipped one of the bracelets over her wrist, before Nyxem floated the other over to himself and put it over his right arm. Nyxem held out his other arm out as his eyes came awash with a blue glow, and focused on the lid to the metal box. It came undone with a click and quiet hiss, before he propped it open to reveal dull, multicolored stones with white helical streaks on their surface. He glanced at them briefly, before turning back to his Frism.

"The last batch of Awakening Emeras that we processed show no sign of degradation after being transported across the Distortion," he continued. "The intermittent error affecting the Infinity Energy transfer which spoiled the last batch appears to be resolved. There should be no blockers for today's test suite."

Nyxem floated up one of the stones from the chest, before sliding it into the groove on his band until it seated with a faint click. He waited for the Kadabra to do the same, before continuing to speak into the Frism.

"It's been some time since there was a second subject for my experiments who had all the components needed to Mega Evolve," the Porygon-Z said. "We still need to determine whether or not this Aggronite is real and what capabilities it will unlock, but it could help speed up the process of refining the Synchro Looplet."

He turned his gaze back out through the windows as the Sigilyph and Archeops moved into place—just in case their Protects were needed—and looked out over the battlefield. On one end, there was Samson, flexing his claws. On the other, there was Hess, who was up at the grate that he'd come from and tried to yank it free before frantically pounding on it.

"Commencing experiment."

Nyxem brought his free arm down on the jewel set in the Looplet and pressed down. A jagged ray of white light suddenly shot out and arced down towards the battlefield, with a second coming from the Kadabra at his side. The lights continued on until they connected with the Looplets on the Aggron and Heracross' limbs below.

The reaction was immediate: Hess and Samson's eyes widened as they both fell to the ground, writhing and bellowing out in pain as the Looplets suddenly came aglow and white light began to spread and envelop up their bodies into a pair of spheres. They lingered for just a moment, before dispelling as bellowing roars and buzzes filled the air.

The results from Samson's end were as expected: the Heracross' carapace had turned a darker shade of blue with red fringes, while his singular horn had shortened and grown more tapered, and it'd been joined by a second, longer one that sprouted from the top of his head. It was Hess' end of the battlefield that was more remarkable, as the Aggron's body was now covered in natural, steely plates that would shame all but the very best armor provided to operatives within the Company.

Nyxem let out a sharp hum, before floating the Frism closer and speaking into it excitedly.

"The stone recovered with the new test subject is indeed an Aggronite. As suspected, his Mega Evolution was successful. Subject seems to have grown in size, and metal plating now covers almost all of his body surface."

Hess and Samson locked eyes with each other, as feral snarls mixed with furious buzzes rang through the air. Samson was the first off the line, as the Heracross flew forward with a series of open-palmed thrusts that landed one after the other on Hess:

One blow hit his shoulder, another his belly, another his chest… Nyxem watched in rapt attention as each blow did little more than make the Aggron stagger back slightly. A final blow to Hess' throat and then his face sent him stumbling with an uneasy gait, only for him to suddenly straighten up. He turned back with a livid glare, opening his mouth with a roaring bellow.

"GRAAAAAAH!"

In a swift motion, the Aggron spun around, his tail taking on a metallic sheen as he drove it into the transformed Heracross' underbelly. Samson tumbled across the arena floor, before coming to a crouching stop. Nyxem looked back towards Hess, where much to his surprise, the Aggron was charging forward without any signs of fatigue about him.

The Porygon-Z looked on in blinking astonishment, before continuing on with his log.

"Subject appears to be barely fazed from Samson's Arm Thrusts even after five blows. His present defenses are nothing short of remarkable," Nyxem said. "He must be a pure Steel-Type right now, even if that doesn't fully explain his present resilience. Further testing is clearly needed."

Nyxem turned his head back towards the arena at the sound of a loud buzz. There, Samson had flown up into the air, while Hess watched his foe from further below. The Heracross suddenly dropped down as the Aggron swiped his claws upwards, sending rocks shooting upwards out of the ground. Samson smashed one of the rocks aside with his arm, while another caught him in his chest. The Bug-Type briefly wavered, only to even out and plant his feet as he hit the ground.

Sharp tremors shook the entire chamber forcefully enough to send dust falling from above. Nyxem looked on as Hess lost his footing and reeled backwards, his snarls coming mixed with winded pants as he watched intently.

"Subject's offensive abilities are similarly much improved, but ineffectively wielded from his use of Rock Slide. Unclear yet whether this is an inhibition from his Mega Evolved state as seen with past subjects freshly entering this state, or just the limitations of this particular individual."

Samson suddenly lunged ahead, throwing himself forward with a flurry of punches that landed one after the other with pained bellows. Nyxem turned his attention towards his Frism, only to stop as he noticed light coming from Hess' end of the battlefield.

There, all along his left claw, there was fire starting to wreath it.

"RAAAAAAAAGH!"

He threw it forward with an uppercut that slammed into Samson's face with a sickening crack. There was a loud scream, as the Heracross shot back, tumbling back along the ground until he came to a stop facedown in the dirt.

He didn't get up, and a few moments later, there was a gold flash as the light on the Heracross' body faded and he reverted back to his original scarred self. A piercing roar split the air as off at Hess' end of the battlefield, the Aggron had thrown his head back and stomped the ground triumphantly. From his place overlooking the battlefield, Nyxem looked on in awe, and spoke up into his Frism again.

"Disregard prior remarks of subject's limitations. Subject clearly has mastered more battling techniques than I initially assumed. Mega Aggron has exceeded all my initial expectations, and I can already tell that future experiments with him will be most enlightening."

Hess started scanning wildly about his surroundings, as the Aggron's attention had turned towards the Heracross on the ground. Up in the observation room, Nyxem looked on before glancing down at the Looplet adorning his left arm.

"Combat test case completed. Now, to test the warding functionality."

Nyxem focused as in a flash of light, he blipped away with his Frism from the observation box and down into the arena pit below. There was a sharp bellow and the ground shook as Hess came charging in towards the fallen Heracross, his horns lowered for a piercing ram as Nyxem moved himself in between the Bug-Type's body.

Hess' gait abruptly stopped as he stared ahead vacantly, the growls from his throat taking on a puzzled-sounding tone. He just stood there for a moment, before sniffing at the air and turning away, letting out low snarls as he kept groping and searching about for another foe to vanquish.

All as expected. Nyxem let out a humming chime, before floating the Frism closer to himself and speaking into it.

"Test successful. End of log."

The Porygon-Z floated the Frism down to the ground, before gathering a white, frigid ray in front of his right arm and casting it down at the icy receptacle. It hit the Frism's opening, caking it over in ice. Nyxem turned his attention to his arm's Looplet afterwards, focusing and prying the stone seated in it with an unseen force.

It cracked and shattered, falling to the ground in pieces as light suddenly swept over Hess' body. His form started shrinking and rearranging back into his body's normal shape, before the light dulled and then faded away entirely. The Aggron staggered woozily about on his feet, before slumping over, panting dazedly as Nyxem floated down and raised his arms with a chiming cheer.

"Well done! Well done! I must say that the results of your first experiment were nothing short of phenomenal."

Hess shambled back up onto his feet, bringing a claw up to his head as he struggled to keep his footing and saw Nyxem staring at him intently.

"Wh-What just happened?"

Hess turned and saw Samson laying splayed out on the battlefield, yellow hemolymph oozing from a split on his carapace as the Aegislash and a couple other guards carried him off. The Aggron looked on for a moment, and in spite of the complete void of memories in his mind since pounding against the grate, things slowly began to piece together for him.

"I… I… did that?"

"Yes," Nyxem replied. "Quite an impressive display, really."

The Porygon-Z's eyes came aglow again as with a flick of his arm, he pulled the Looplet with Hess' Aggronite free of the Steel-Type's arm and back over to his side. The Aggron gasped and pawed at his arm, as Nyxem floated forward, batting his arms together with a cheery clap.

"Congratulations. You are the most promising test subject I've had since that Garchomp," Nyxem said. "I can already tell that I'll be able to do great things with you."

Hess' dumbfounded shock faltered as he grit his teeth and narrowed his eyes. He stomped forward, flashing a claw with a sharp growl that lingered in the air.

"Give me my lucky charm back!" the Aggron snapped. "And I don't know what you did to me, but I-!"

A weak jolt of electricity suddenly went over his limbs, before a sharp, burning blow struck him from the back of the head and sent him pitching forward. The next thing Hess knew, he was lying on his belly on the arena floor, and a Jolteon and a Blaziken were pinning him down. The Jolteon stood on the back of his neck as the Blaziken wrenched his arms back to bind them together. The Aggron panted briefly, and let out a low, defeated whine as Nyxem floated up and looked down towards him.

"Have done quite enough for me today," the Porygon-Z insisted. "Unfortunately we'll have to wait with any further experiments. I'm waiting for an old colleague of mine to arrive, and we won't be progressing any further until then."

Hess panted and widened his eyes as Nyxem brought his head down, and an eerie smirk settled over his face.

"I'll be looking forward to doing more experiments with you soon."

Hess let out a startled cry as the Blaziken jerked him up, before he and the Jolteon started herding him off the field. The whole time, Nyxem looked on, giving an idle glance after the Aggron as his stammering cries of protest faded, and then down at the gray, swirled stone his mind was holding aloft in the air.

"This has already been a most promising start."



Rosequartz Town hadn't changed all that much in the few weeks that Elty had last seen it. Sure there were some signs of fighting here and there, and the main square looked like a shell had blown up in it, but between the same scruffy stone-walled and slate-roofed buildings and the equally scruffy Pokémon that went about between them, it was very much how he remembered it.

Or at least it would've been if it weren't for all the Pokémon who stopped and stared at the Imperials and the towering serpent with him. Yes, Elty supposed that it was a bit different for Imps and a Protector of all Pokémon to just openly go around Rosequartz Town like this.

He tried to ignore the others' reactions and just kept going forward, checking his surroundings just in case that deal Nagant had struck up was a bit less ironclad than she'd assumed. There were the obvious pirates drinking in front of a tavern, with a Stoutland among them grumbling about 'the town going to the dogs'. Up ahead, there was a pair of Timburr lugging along a wooden cannon in broad daylight, and a little further down, there was a Braviary and a Morpeko that glowered in Nagant's direction from the stoop of a complex of buildings flying red banners. The Braviary shot a withering glare as Elty and the others passed, before turning aside with a sullen scoff.

"Tá sé seo áiféiseach," the Braviary growled. "We busted our tails with that raid earlier and now we've got to go and raid Nagrobek of all places without getting to keep anything?"

"That sounds like a 'you' problem for getting caught," the Morpeko retorted. "I got a bag of loot from Gestirn that's been treating me plenty well ever since leaving."

… Maybe it was for the best to hurry on from the way that the Braviary's face contorted at the Morpeko's reply. Elty picked up the pace as some sort of heated argument broke out further behind.

"Yeesh, talk about a rough neighborhood," Cabot murmured.

Berecien glanced over his shoulder and let his gaze linger for a moment. His eyes narrowed, before turning back with a disgusted snort.

"Why are we tolerating this again from Pokémon that are supposed to be working with us?" the Ponyta demanded.

"Because you literally have no choice right now and the alternative is trying to take over a dug-in island while hopelessly undermonned?" Alice replied with a shrug.

Berecien pinned his ears and gave a sharp huff in reply. From the side, Elty cocked a brow, tilting his head at the Ponyta.

"Isn't your captain's crew literally half mercenaries and former pirates anyways?" Elty asked. "Why on earth are you so bothered by this when this is just another day for you?"

"Look, there are standards within the Royal Navy!" Berecien snapped, stomping a hoof. "We don't just openly discuss looting like a bunch of common scoundrels!"

"Tch, speak for yourself," Niilo cut in. "My contract says that as part of my service I get to keep whatever I take off of 'mons I defea-"

There was a sharp hiss as the Sandslash's eyes suddenly widened and he jumped back from an incoming Water Pulse. A quick glance forward revealed Nagant had whirled about on her tail and was training her gaze at the Ground-Type with a withering glare, only to turn to Berecien with a frown that prompted him to similarly stiffen up.

"That's enough, all of you," the Clawitzer hissed. "I already have enough headaches with everything going on, and I don't need you all bickering like children on top of everything."

Berecien and Niilo fell silent, and beyond shooting frowns at each other, they said nothing as Nagant turned and continued leading them forward. All the while, the smell of salt water in the air grew stronger as Elty looked and saw that at the end of the street was the familiar sight of the sea and ships' sails and masts poking over the surrounding rooftops. He blinked, as he turned over to Nagant with a puzzled frown.

"Wait, the docks? Why are we going over here?" Elty asked. "I thought we weren't ready to set sail yet."

"We aren't. We're meeting someone to help prepare us for that. That pirate captain that the Council looped in to fill their vacancy apparently participated in the last pirate raid on Nagrobek and played a leading role in gathering intelligence for it," Nagant explained. "Given that we'll have to do much the same ourselves, I thought it would be wise to touch base with him and see what we're getting into."

Right, Dirk had mentioned that there was some old captain that Nagant should be reaching out to, with a name that sounded weirdly familiar. At the same time, this 'mon somehow was involved in spying on the place beforehand? And lived to tell the tale afterwards? That was certainly something he'd never heard of from others on Orleigh that he knew had been there at that raid.

Elty turned his head after they exited the street and started walking along the docks, studying the ships in port as they continued forward. He passed along a couple piers and saw that the Crimson Corsairs' red-sailed ships were a ways further down the docks. As he started walking by the red-colored ships, he noticed that the Strongjaw Gang's orange-sailed ones were behind them and almost on the entire other end of the harbor.

So, this Pokémon wasn't from either of their crews… but then who-?

"Oi, Cillian, put your back into things! I've been on the sidelines for six years and can still run up and down a gangplank faster than that!"

Elty looked up ahead where there at the next pier down, he saw a Feraligatr by a barquentine with blue sails. The Water-Type was calling up to a Beartic lugging a set of ropes up a gangplank going up to the deck, his arms folded and his face curled up into a small smirk. Elty blinked incredulously at the sight as it dawned on him that this was the same trinket-seller who'd showed them that map for getting around Pioppo. He really was once Council material?

Partway over, the pirates along the ship abruptly stopped and turned over wide-eyed as their attention all drifted over to Kline, including the Beartic, who stumbled and fell off the gangplank with a loud yelp and splash. Laurens turned around himself as his own eyes visibly widened, his attention drifting up as Kline slithered up to him.

"Ah yes, you must be Laurens. Or I suppose Captain Laurens now."

Kline brought his head down towards the Feraligatr, who visibly stiffened up as the Zygarde's face met his. Laurens stared wordlessly in dumbstruck awe, as from the side, Elty's own face looked not all that much different as he traded looks between the two…

If for somewhat different reasons.

"You're the one filling the vacant spot on the Council?" Elty asked.

"I did say that I used to be a captain in my own right, Growlithe," the Feraligatr explained. "I don't know who talked Dirk into agreeing to this, but he and Tarquin tasked me to take over the Torrent Tsars' last ship along with whatever else I can scrape together and raise a crew, so I've been calling in some old favors to fill the gaps."

He looked back to the pirates around the ship, reaching down to pull up the Beartic from the water with a low grunt.

"Tell everyone to take five, Cillian," he said. "I need a bit of time to talk with these Imps."

The Beartic saluted, still dripping, before scampering off and calling out back up to the deck. Laurens shuffled off down the pier, motioning for Elty and the others to follow. They began making their way down the docks together, as the Feraligatr tilted his head and peered down at the Growlithe with a puzzled frown.

"Though what are you doing back here?" Laurens asked "And where's the rest of your friends? Especially that long-necked Wingull who was with you?"

Elty froze as his ears and tails drooped, averting his gaze with a deflated whine. The Feraligatr cocked a brow, as Nagant hopped in between them with a serious frown.

"They've met much the same fates as the pirates who failed to come back to Orleigh."

Laurens' eyes widened at the response. The Feraligatr faltered afterwards, setting his teeth on edge with a low murmur.

"Then, they're-"

"A matter that's best discussed in greater depth another time. In private," Nagant harrumphed. "We have a window of five days at most in order to have our best chances at successfully raiding Nagrobek. So for the sake of Lugia's friends and any of your companions you had to leave behind there seven years ago, I need to know what you did while planning out the previous raid on Nagrobek."

Laurens paused for a moment, the grimace on his face fading as a noticeable frown came over his maw as they reached the end of the pier.

"I don't know why you're asking me when that raid failed, but I had 'mons infiltrate the ranks of the local guards and map out the town and its facilities," the Feraligatr said. "We spent a lot of time scouting out the prison in particular, since that's the main stronghold of the island."

He stopped and folded his arms, as he turned his snout down to meet the Clawitzer with a gaze that looked almost as if it could pierce through her shell.

"You lot had told us that Beatrice the Swift was there along with her crew," Laurens huffed. "We thought that if we could throw the prison into chaos, that she and the others inside would give us a fighting chance to overrun those square-necks."

Yes, Elty remembered hearing the story from Pyry that Beatrice had been sent to Nagrobek after a big raid on Canalhouse City. Word around town these days was that she was never there in the first place, but Pyry had been convinced that she'd died in prison.

There was a confused look among the Imperials, and most of Team Zephyr's for that matter. Alice seemed to catch on to where things were going as her fur visibly bristled in discomfort.

"We were mistaken back then," Laurens growled. "Both about Beatrice being there, and about trusting anything you Imps said."

Cabot and the others traded worried glances with one another, all while Kline subtly studied Nagant's reaction. The whole time, the Clawitzer remained unmoved beyond meeting Laurens' gaze with a steely, unyielding expression.

"… I didn't have any involvement in whatever happened back then, Feraligatr. I had a posting in the border waters towards the south at the time," Nagant explained. "I can't speak for whoever relayed that intelligence to you, but at the time your raid happened, that was what my colleagues and I thought happened to Beatrice. Given that I'll be physically present for that raid, I have no reason to lie to you about the present state of affairs on Nagrobek."

The two stared at each for a moment, before Nagant lowered her gaze with a quiet murmur.

"I'll admit that it's not particularly easy for me to have sympathy for a Pokémon like you, but I can understand how much it hurts to watch friends and comrades suddenly being ripped away," she said. "Though I'm still confused about how on earth this all happened. Even without Beatrice, shouldn't there have been a chance of the breakout succeeding? What went wrong?"

Laurens' scowl faltered as his gaze softened and turned wistful. He averted his eyes, rubbing at his right arm with a low, deflated murmur.

"The prison held and the breakout didn't succeed," the Feraligatr replied. "I don't know what exactly happened inside, but back out in Dulefield Town, we were ambushed by Company reinforcements coming in. It kept us from being able to cut and run with what loot we had back then, forcing every 'mon to fend for themselves."

"… If nothing else, we at least won't have to worry about reinforcements this time," Nagant said. "Or at least for now. I can't guarantee that will be the case if we can't get this raid started within five days."

She hesitated and twitched her barbels briefly, before carrying on with an insistent chitter.

"Our plan is to have a team of Pokémon go ahead of us and scout before we come ashore," Nagant continued. "I just need to know what they should be aware of before they set off."

"It's not that easy, Clawitzer."

Laurens studied Nagant, trading glances between her and the Zygarde further behind her, before training a skeptical frown down at her.

"Do you have anyone inside the actual prison already?"

"Er… not anyone that we have a way of getting in touch with?" Elty said.

"Technically I do have someone, but as a prisoner he is in no position to act as an inside 'mon," Kline corrected.

"Then I don't know what exactly you hope to accomplish. The prison's literally attached to the island's garrison and functions as the central hub for its defenses," Laurens said. "The guards posted there were better trained than most sailors I've run into either in Company or Imperial waters. Without someone on the inside to tell you what they're up to, they'll pick you apart."

The Feraligatr trailed off for a moment, shaking his head and folding his arms.

"It took me a lot longer than five days to get my 'mons in last time. It's been seven years since I last saw that gods-forsaken rock and I have no idea how it's changed at all beyond some loose stories that I've heard."

Nagant fell silent as the others traded uneasy glances with each other. After weighing his thoughts for a moment, Elty made his way forward and hesitantly spoke up.

"… What if there was another group we could ask for help?" the Growlithe asked. "Did you try working with the local ferals last time?"

There was a blinking pause, as both Laurens and the others around Elty stared at him. The Feraligatr broke the silence, as he tilted his head with a curious rumble from his throat.

"… Well, no. But how would that help?" he asked. "I mean, it's not as if I don't know how to talk to a 'mon that lives like that. But ferals normally don't care about whatever civilized Pokémon are getting up to if it doesn't involve their own territories. Trust me, I've been on both ends of that conversation."

'Both ends of that conversation'? … Right, Laurens had mentioned once being a feral himself. Even if Elty never would've pegged him as having been one when he first saw him hawking his charms a couple of weeks ago. Though he supposed he wouldn't have pegged Laurens as a captain either from an initial glance if Rasp hadn't told him otherwise.

That was the part that made him uneasy about this whole idea. What if Laurens had seen something about the ferals back then that convinced him not to even try?

… No, if there was anyone who knew about what the ferals who lived on Nagrobek were like, especially back during this raid, it was him. And he could think of some things that Pokémon like his mother could've done to help if she would've been convinced…

"Well, the ferals on Nagrobek know the lay of the land the best," Elty offered. "So maybe they would know ways of sneaking up on the prison and other facilities. And they might be willing to help fight, too…"

Elty trailed off briefly as his ears and tail drooped. Unwanted memories of running through the stripped forest as mom stayed behind fighting came to mind. He briefly tensed up and shook his head to try and dispel them, but it didn't do anything about the way his head and shoulders suddenly felt so much heavier…

"When I lived on that island, Elilan's guards would snatch us from the wilds for whatever excuse they could come up with, and then throw us into that prison," he explained. "Whatever Pokémon are still around, I'm sure that they'd want to get rid of him too."

Laurens hesitated for a moment, before giving Elty a sympathetic look and stooping down to pet the top of his head. From the side, Berecien stepped forward as he cast a dubious frown at the two former ferals.

"Not that I don't blame you all for having a grudge against those square-necks, but ferals aren't exactly united under one authority," the Ponyta said. "If what you said is accurate, then we can't even take it for granted that Elilan isn't already playing different groups of ferals against each other. Where on earth would we even start if we tried to get them to help us?"

"You'd be best off trying to approach the ones in the Mystery Dungeon first."

Berecien turned back and saw Calidus meeting his eyes. The Ponyta blinked in surprise as there was a lingering quiet, which was finally broken by Niilo after he turned to face the Talonflame with a puzzled frown.

"Wait, why would we want to do that again?" the Sandslash asked.

"Pokémon of dungeon stock do tend to work together in ways that ferals outside often don't. They have to with the sort of environment they live in," Calidus explained. "If things are as bad for ferals on Nagrobek as Elty's saying, it'd be the most likely place where they'd hole up. You can't track down a nest or a den as easily when its place shifts around during the day."

Laurens' face turned pensive, as crossed his arms and tilted his head slightly. The Feraligatr visibly weighed his thoughts in his head, before he mused aloud to himself.

"I'll admit that it's something, but it's still not a replacement for knowing what's going on inside the prison and Nagrobek's defenses. I can tell you from experience that looking from the outside in will only go so far," Laurens said. "Neither the local ferals nor whatever team you send in are likely to get a proper read of things in just five days."

"What about the villagers in Dulefield Town?" Berecien asked. "It's not as if things can be kept a secret from them on their own island, so what if we tried to find out more about how the defenses are set up from them?"

Laurens looked over towards Berecien, as his face took an exasperated turn and grew impressively long even for a Pokémon with a large snout like him.

"I'd say that you were being very optimistic there, Ponyta," the Feraligatr retorted. "Last I checked, Imps aren't exactly popular in Company waters, let alone Imps collaborating with pirates. Just how are you going to find someone who both knows what's going on and willing to talk to you?"

"I might have an idea, actually…"

Everyone turned in surprise as Kline slithered up to the front of the group. Berecien seemed taken aback for a moment, as the Zygarde turned his eyes down towards the others.

"I know a Pokémon in Dulefield Town through a close friend of mine who might be able to help. It's admittedly been a long time since either of us met him, but at the very least we won't have to start from scratch," Kline offered. "Also, there is one crucial difference between that last raid of yours and the one we're planning now…"

The Zygarde fanned his tendrils out, turning his head up with a determined huff.

"I wasn't there to fight alongside you back then," he said. "Surely having a Protector at your side would give us a fighting chance to take over Nagrobek, wouldn't you say?"

Laurens blinked wordlessly and stared at the Zygarde for a moment, as a small smile began to work its way over his face. He closed his eyes, shaking his head with a small chuckle.

"… Maybe it's just me being a superstitious old sea dog for believing in a Protector I'd never even heard of before today, but I'll admit, it's not a bad argument," the Feraligatr said. "I suppose your plan could work, but…"

Laurens trailed off for a moment, turning his attention back to Nagant with a wary frown.

"Just who are you going to send to scout things out?" he asked. "Since your snake buddy here wasn't exactly subtle when he came into town earlier."

"I am, of course," Elty cut in. "Nagrobek's my home island, so of course I'm goi-"

A sharp hiss cut him off mid-sentence, as Nagant whirled about on her tail. She slightly shifted her firing claw, her mouthparts curling into a visible frown

"That is a matter that I will decide, Growlithe," Nagant said. "This isn't some Rescue Team mission of yours where you can just be teleported out or rescued if something goes wrong."

Elty pinned his ears and huffed back. He dug his paws in, before shaking his head and raising his voice in protest.

"Wiem o tym! But I want to help get my friends out of prison! Why else do you think I'm not back on Gestirn with the rest of Beatrix's crew?!" the Growlithe exclaimed. "And you need me to help! Unless you have another 'mon on your crew who grew up as a feral on Nagrobek, I'm the only one who's familiar with how things work in that Mystery Dungeon!"

Nagant remained unmoved as her frown grew visibly sharper. Before she could interject, she felt a nudge at her shoulder and glanced over to see Berecien nosing at her with a wary expression.

"… He does have a point, Captain," the Ponyta insisted. "I was going to volunteer myself to go with whatever group you sent out since my speech won't stand out locally. Besides, I wanted a chance to see the home that my parents had to leave behind."

Nagant didn't say anything back for a moment. The Ponyta waited expectantly, only for the Clawitzer to keep her expression firm, when a shadow fell over her. She pivoted on her tail, looking up to see Kline peering down at her.

"You are short on time right now, Nagant. Given that your scouts will only have a few days to work with, it would be beneficial if at least some of the Pokémon you send were already familiar with the island," he said. "Besides, this clearly matters a lot to Eltenios and Berecien on a personal level. Are you really going to find others on your crew who would be more motivated than them for this mission?"

Nagant twitched her barbels briefly, before turning back to Elty and Berecien with a grudging sigh.

"… We'll talk more about this later, but I'll keep your requests in mind." she said, before shifting her attention to Laurens. "While I don't normally pay much mind to the sentiments of pirates, I'll give you and your peers a chance to voice concerns with the strategies I and my superior are considering beforehand."

"I'll hold you to that," the Feraligatr grunted, nodding his head. "Best of luck to you and your sailors."

Nagant turned and began to hop off as one by one, Berecien and his companions, and then Team Zephyr followed after her. Elty lingered behind briefly as Laurens walked back towards his ship and barked out to his sailors to get back to work. It was well-timed on his part from the looks of it given there were a few Pokémon coming up from the docks with supplies and repair materials and headed in the ship's direction. There was a Golisopod in a teal scarf bringing along a bucket of pitch, a Machoke lugging along a stack of wooden planks, a Ribombee leading along a Flygon carrying a bundle of sailcloth…

He blinked and turned his head back after the last two.

"Wait a minute…"

That was Flygon was Rasp! The innkeeper who ran the place they'd stayed in the last time he and Team Traveller were here on the island! And Bech from the Secret Bazaar was there, too!

The Growlithe paced ahead after the Flygon and his father, and as the two turned to leave, he barked out after them for attention.

"Rasp? Bech?"

The Ribombee flitted in place before turning around, his Flygon child following after more slowly. Their eyes met his and there was a flash of recognition, along with a tension in Rasp's body that made Elty freeze in realization.

Right, Nida had mentioned that when she, Guardia and Pleo were getting chased around Rosequartz Town, that Pleo had trashed the main square… And he'd badly hurt Rasp and Bech in the process.

He hadn't personally been there to see it since he was with the Iron Fleet when everything happened. But the two looked like they were doing better now, so…

"What are you doing here?" Elty asked.

The two didn't say anything at first, but just from their postures, Elty already could tell that something was wrong. Rasp's face visibly fell and his tail flicked back and forth agitatedly. In the air off to his side, Bech shot an aside glance at his son, before flying down with a small smile.

"Oh, it's you again. It's been a while, kid," the Ribombee said. "Laurens called in a favor and asked us to help get his ships sailworthy. Though what are you doing here?"

"Oh, you know, going along with this raid to try and save my friends and stuff," Elty explained, waving a forepaw. "But who'd have thought we'd wind up working with each other like this again?"

Elty wagged his tail and forced a smile over his face as he looked back up at the two. He faltered almost immediately after noticing Rasp's face falling into a withering glare and him flaring his wings. Bech visibly hesitated in the air as he went and flew up beside the Flygon, giving a hushed "Come on, Rasp…" that caught his ears.

The Flygon's expression visibly refused to budge, and when Elty's eyes drifted leftward, he noticed a faint scar running along the Flygon's wing.

Rasp pulled his wings back in, before craning his head down towards his father with an audible harrumph.

"Tar anois, a Dhaid. We need to get going," he insisted. "Those sails aren't going to hoist themselves."

The Flygon turned away and started making his way down the pier as Bech lingered in place for a moment. The Ribombee wavered, and looked back at Elty uneasily.

"Don't mind Rasp, he's just been through a lot lately," he said. "I'm sure that he'll be in a better mood eventually."

… Yeah, probably sometime after he left.

There was a sharp woosh as Rasp jumped up and took wing, as Bech turned and flew off after him. From his place on the pier, Elty watched, opening his mouth to call out, only for the words to hang in his throat:

Just what could he even tell them right now?

His ears and tail fell, and he let his head hang as his eyes drifted down towards the wood under his paws.

"Hey, what's the holdup?"

He briefly looked behind and saw that Alice had split off from the rest of the group to come back for him. The Sneasel looked at him for a moment, before her gaze drifted up at the sky where Rasp and Bech were flying off. She watched them for a moment, before turning back to Elty with a curious raise of her brow.

"… Those old friends of yours or something?" Alice asked.

Elty didn't raise his gaze from the pier. He turned away from the Flygon and Ribombee vanishing off in the distance, and shook his head with a deflated murmur.

"I wish," he said. "Come on, let's just get out of here."

Alice hesitated briefly, before turning and continuing on for the path back to the Council's manor. Elty trudged along beside her, his ears and tail drooping the entire time.



Nida stepped past the threshold of an open set of double doors and squinted her eyes against the almost blinding light. Three days in, and it was still surprising how being in darkened tunnels for so long would make normal sunlight so hard to adjust back to.

She made her way down a set of broad steps, first glancing back at the exit to the prison wing behind her, and then off towards her surroundings ahead:

It was the same bleak, featureless space she remembered being brought out to in the days before: tall brick walls with guards patrolling their tops left, right, and center, with a ground covered in pavestones. The only hint of nature that was there at all was the increasingly westerly sun of a late afternoon sky overhead… and the other Pokémon here inside the courtyard with her.

This was apparently the place in this prison where prisoners were supposed to have "recreation"… or what passed for it, since Nida couldn't see anything that remotely resembled a game, beyond the occasional battle that didn't look particularly like playful sparring. More typically, Pokémon would gather off into small groups that huddled together, while others would go off on their own and wander about aimlessly. Wherever she looked, both sorts of Pokémon would usually look closer to being "sullen" or "exhausted" than like they were doing anything they were actually enjoying.

She scanned her eyes as she went about, where there, off in the left corner at the far end of the yard, she could see Kiran, Pladur, Albert, and Pyry all gathered and talking together. The Swellow from the group noticed her and hailed her by raising a wing, as she shuffled forward to meet them. As Nida walked up, she noticed that they all looked tired and covered with dust and soot, just as she surely was herself after a long day's work at the smelters.

She also noticed that there was still a noticeable tension about them. Kiran raised his head and looked around for a moment, before checking the top of the wall. After seeing that they weren't being watched, he shuffled aside to let Nida join their circle. Pladur was the first to speak, as he turned his tusked head with a hushed murmur.

"Cómo salió todo, Nida?" the Fraxure asked. "Did you manage to sneak anything out?"

"I did, actually," the Nidorina replied. "I stole an Oran Berry during my last shift that was small enough to hide in my scarf. I don't think anybody noticed me when I took it…"

After briefly scanning their surroundings for herself, Nida pawed at the knot of her scarf and pulled out the Oran Berry she'd kept hidden under it… if it could be called that from how small and underripe it was. The berry didn't seem to inspire much confidence in her teammates, as Albert briefly eyed it, before shaking his head with a low sigh.

"That's… not a very big Oran Berry," the Nuzleaf murmured. "Though are you sure it's going to stay good long enough for when we try to get out of here?"

Nida quietly lowered her ears and averted her gaze. She hadn't thought about that. She'd gotten herself so worked up over getting that berry, but just from what she could already see from the others, she got the feeling that they weren't expecting to get out of here before it went bad.

Perhaps she should've known better. Since even that hidden entrance she'd spotted while working at the smelters wasn't something they were sure they could use to escape. Still, between the five of them, surely someone else had to have some ideas of what they could do…?

"I was assuming that it would," the Nidorina murmured. "Did any of you find any potential leads out of here?"

The others traded mostly blank looks with each other, which Nida supposed was as good a sign as any that they hadn't. The one exception was Albert, who paused for a moment, before speaking up to the others.

"One of the guards pulled back a panel on one of the walls in our cellblock and I saw there was a keyhole behind it. It might not be much, but if there's tunnels that the guards use to get around, maybe we could use that to our advantage," the Nuzleaf offered. "I don't know if we'd be able to get through it on our own, but if we managed to rally some help-"

"… Then it's not worth bothering with."

Pyry shuffled away and hung his head. Nida blinked as Kiran and the others shot askew glances at the Gabite, the Swellow warily raising his brow.

"Huh?" Kiran asked. "Why not?"

"Because Elilan will just make an Illusion if the guards realize there's trouble happening. That's what happened during the riot that Pekka and I escaped in."

Pyry shook his head, his mood and gait both seeming to sink lower and lower in front of their eyes.

"It was a very strong one, since we almost got lost right at the very edge of a hole in the wall," the Gabite explained. "All this time, we've never run into anyone else who made it out of the prison walls beside us. Maybe there's some sort of way we could sneak out if it's just a few of us, but once those Illusions go up, I just don't think there's a way for us to get out of here."

Everyone fell silent as Nida quietly tensed up and grimaced. If Elilan could really do that, then just finding a way out wasn't enough. It'd mean that to have any hope of escaping, they'd also have to somehow get out before Elilan found out about their absence, which Nida wasn't sure would be possible unless he just wasn't around… and he'd almost certainly normally would be here since this was the island he was supposed to run as an Administrator.

Then… would any of this actually work? Or had they just been grasping at straws this entire time?

… Were they really just going to be trapped here forever? Nida had tried telling herself that it'd only been a couple days so far. That they'd already gotten out of impossible-looking situations in the past, but the more she found out about this place, the harder it was to see any way out.

She looked up past the top of the walls and off at the skies above, as clouds drifted in the distance along a southern wind, towards where Pleo was somewhere far away and across the sea.

A part of her hoped that he was doing better than them. However, after being all alone for three days and with the way that Lyn had treated him the last time he caught him… was he really better off? At least when the Imperials caught him, he had others to talk to. It wasn't as if that Samurott would let anyone close to him, and gods knew what he and the Board were planning for him.

Travellers above, could it be that he'd actually be doing worse than them? Nida assumed that Lyn wouldn't be making Pleo do hard labor, but was he lonely right now? Was he scared?

She just wished that she knew…

"Listen up you miserable wastes of flesh!"

Nida and the others turned their heads at the sound of a sharp shout and a tremor coming from the entrance of the prison yard that jolted through the ground. There, coming down those same steps she'd descended earlier, was Junius. The Marowak pulled his bone back from the ground, sauntering up along with a party of lavender-scarved guards. It was hard to miss the reactions of the other prisoners as he passed, some shooting hateful glares, while others shrank away at his approach. The Marowak seemed to enjoy both sets of reactions, as he went about and sneered about the prison yard.

"We've got a newcomer today: someone I'm sure that some of you are just dying to meet."

"Nrgh!"

Junius leveled his club off towards the steps, where there was a Dragonite getting shoved along by guards. He winced in pain with every jostle, as Nida saw that his wings had had holes oozing blood torn into them. She cringed at the sight, as the thought crossed her mind that he somehow looked familiar.

She noticed a number of other prisoners turning their heads in surprise as the Dragonite was marched forward up to Junius, when Nida stiffened up as she suddenly realized why this Dragonite looked so familiar to her…

"This is Darzin. Yes, that Darzin," Junius said. "The now-former Company Administrator of Tromba."

Nida pinned her ears back as she saw a dark mood start to settle among the other prisoners. Growls started coming from all around, as various prisoners started getting up and a few began making tentative steps towards Darzin. Between them and the malicious sneers on the guards, she could already tell that it wasn't a sign of anything good. Her teammates seemed to think much the same, as they traded worried looks with each other.

The only one in the entire courtyard who didn't seem to really react to it was Darzin himself, who glowered and growled from beneath his bindings. Junius gave a brief glance at the growing crowd of prisoners about them, before shooting a self-satisfied smirk out at them as he gestured at Darzin with his club.

"Looks like you all have some catching up to do," the Marowak remarked. "We'll let you have a moment to give this fat embarrassment the old 'Nagrobek welcome'."

A Pawmot undid Darzin's chains as the guards beside him shoved him forward towards the other prisoners. The Dragonite fought to stay on his feet for a moment as the guards started heading off. Darzin whirled around, dragonfire starting to wreath his claws as he began to go after them.

"You."

It dissipated as Darzin paused and turned his head back towards the prisoners gathering around him. There was a Mamoswine making his way forward with a small group. He pawed at the ground with a foreleg, and a look that reminded Nida as one her mami would have when she was mad enough to send a 'mon to the Medics' Hut… which almost all the other prisoners and around him shared.

Darzin briefly glanced about the others, before answering with a glare of his own.

"What do you want, Mamoswine?"

"I've spent six years in this godsforsaken hole because of you square-necks," the Mamoswine growled. "I might never get out this place alive, but I'll be content with taking your hide as-"

Darzin cut the Mamoswine off with a Fire Punch to the face, sending him stumbling back. The Ice-Type fought to keep his footing, as Darzin crouched and suddenly lunged ahead, blue dragonfire wreathing his entire body which Nida recognized as being the same Dragon Rush that she'd seen Pleo use. The Dragonite struck the Mamoswine with a sharp thud, his momentum throwing the Ice-Type off his feet and to a groaning stop on his side. Flashes of alarm went about the other Pokémon in the group, as a few uneasily shifted back, while Darzin bared his fangs with a sharp growl.

"Do you really think you miserable worms are just going to kick me around?!" the Dragonite spat. "I got to where I was by my strength, and I'll gladly remind you of-"

An Ambipom charged ahead and buffeted Darzin mid-sentence with a pair of slams with his tails. The Dragonite briefly lost his footing, before roaring and driving a set of claws trailing dragonfire deep into the Ambipom's gut. A pained scream followed, as the monkey limply pitched to the ground. A Whirlipede slammed into Darzin from the right, only to be met with much the same fate, when a cloud of orange powder suddenly overtook him.

"Ah!"

The Dragonite's limbs visibly locked up and grew sluggish, a quick glance back revealing a Masquerain hurriedly darting away, stray orange powder still lingering about her. A Ludicolo then spat up a Hydro Pump from behind that sent Darzin pitching forward with a sharp cry, prompting a Drapion to rush in with a slash trailing darkened contrails.

The other prisoners' hesitation melted away after that, as one after the other, they descended upon the Dragonite. They rained down blow after blow upon him as Darzin's cries came out increasingly pained and frantic.

Nida looked on in blank shock as they just kept going, while the guards, beyond a disinterested look here and there, did nothing to intervene as Darzin wildly thrashed and swiped his claws. There were fresh cuts and bruises all over Darzin's hide. His earlier defiance was completely gone, as the Dragonite curled up to try and shield himself from the mob attacking him. Nida's breath caught in her throat as she noticed an Excadrill approaching, bringing his claws together and lining them up with the wounded dragon's underbelly.

"Time to make you scream, you filthy square-"

The Excadrill abruptly stopped as a whirling bone smashed into him, sending him slumping over Darzin and collapsing into a heap on his other side. A stream of burning sand drove off the Drapion just afterwards, and a Thunder Punch from the Pawmot among the prison guards sent the Ludicolo hurriedly limping off before the gathered prisoners scattered. A series of sharp taps against stone turned everyone's attention back to the steps leading into the courtyard, where there was Junius, strolling downwards with a piercing glare.

"Alright, you scum have had your fun, show's over," the Marowak barked. "Anyone who's still going at it in the next five seconds gets a free trip to the Pit. Tonight."

The prisoners faltered briefly, before grudgingly slinking off one by one, a few laggards staying to help their wounded fellows limp off or else to glare and snarl hushed invective at the still curled-up Dragonite. The moment after the crowd cleared, Junius sauntered up, Darzin wearily raising his head with hoarse, shaken pants. The Marowak raised his bone and thrust it forward with a sharp jab at a cut along Darzin's flank, making the dragon recoil with a sharp cry as a malicious smile came over Junius' face.

"Looks like you're really popular here, Darzin," he sneered. "In case you were too dense to figure it out, but things don't work the same way they did when you were wearing Company lavenders. Keep making enemies like that, and you'll be lucky to last the week."

Junius gave a parting swat at the dragon's rump with his bone. Darzin flinched, before stumbling up onto his feet and limping off awkwardly, his wings and antennae now visibly drooping. Nida watched the Dragonite lumber along leftward, a few prisoners stopping to cry out particularly harsh insults as he made his way to the edge of the yard by the wall. He sat down in front of the bricks and just stayed there, staring.

Nida pinned her ears back and averted her gaze. This was the hated tyrant of Tromba who'd just been humbled in front of everyone present, and yet, unlike those stories Mami would tell her about her fateful battle defeating Darzin and sending him fleeing with his tail between his legs, this felt… wrong somehow. A quick glance over her companions revealed similarly uncomfortable expressions, as Kiran stared at Darzin for a moment, before he shook his feathers with an uneasy mutter.

"I suppose this hasn't been the first fight that I've seen in this yard since coming here, but that certainly got uglier than I expected," the Swellow said.

"What on earth even happened?" Pladur asked. "I know that Darzin was supposed to have fallen afoul with the Board, but winding up here of all places as a common prisoner?"

The others traded uneasy murmurs as Kiran wondered aloud if the Company had found out that Darzin tried to work with Nagant. The whole time, Nida looked on with a strange but familiar discomfort. She couldn't place where that uneasy feeling was coming from or why it felt so familiar, when it suddenly dawned on her:

She'd felt like this after Lyn had captured them all, when she saw Hess' utterly defeated and crushed expression. She never got the chance to speak to him afterwards, and considering what became of him, she likely never would.

But Darzin was here right now. Even if a part of her still wasn't sure if approaching him was really a good idea, could she take it for granted she'd be able to talk with him later…?.

Nida began to make her way towards Darzin, when a surprised squawk came from behind her. She felt scales and feathers holding her back, as Kiran and Pladur both quickly caught up with her, the Swellow looking at her with a startled stare.

"Nida, qué estás haciendo?" Kiran demanded.

"I want to go and talk to him," Nida replied. "It just doesn't feel right to leave Darzin like that."

Pladur stared at her for a moment as the corners of his mouth drooped, before he gave a dubious shake of his head in reply.

"I don't think that's a good idea, Nida," the Fraxure said. "You saw how the others reacted to him. If they think that we're together, then-"

"Pladur, it'll be fine."

The dragon's words trailed off in his mouth as Nida cut him off. She glanced back at him, meeting his eyes, steady and unyielding.

"It'll just be a moment. If there's any trouble, I'll come right back."

Neither of the two looked convinced, but after a brief hesitation, they let her go. Nida warily began to walk towards the prison wall that Darzin was sitting against. The Dragonite looked visibly winded and his antennae were drooping. As she neared, she thought she saw moisture beading up in the corners of his eyes, before her gaze turned to the red-flecked holes standing out against the teals of his wing membranes.

Nida winced at the sight. She knew that Kiran had had his flight feathers cut, but she didn't remember seeing other winged prisoners dealt with like this over the past couple days. She briefly considered turning back, but before she could, Darzin twitched his antennae and turned his head up at her approach

Almost immediately, he forced back the defeated expression on his face. He stood up and flared his tattered wings, flashing his fangs and claws with a wobbly gait.

"Hrmph, so you're here to try your luck fighting me, too," Darzin growled. "If you seriously think you stand a chance against me alone, you have another thing coming!"

Nida looked on wordlessly as her face curled into a frown. She shook out her barbs, before narrowing her eyes with an unamused harrumph.

"You're really making things tempting, just saying," the Nidorina replied. "But no, I came here because I was worried about you."

Nida briefly checked her surroundings, before bringing her paw up to the knot of her scarf. She pulled out the Oran Berry stashed away from it and held it out toward the Dragonite.

"We already have enough enemies in this place as it is," she said. "Quick, take the berry before the guards see it. You're not going to last long going into work tomorrow without anything to tend to those wounds."

Darzin stared at her with a slow, wary blink. After a few moments, that earlier suspicion returned, as his face visibly fell with a sullen huff.

"Are you mocking me right now?" the Dragonite demanded.

"I could've done that just fine without walking all the way over to you," Nida retorted. "Look, do you want the berry or not? Since if you don't, I'm fine holding onto it myself."

Darzin gave Nida a blank look for a moment, before warily snatching the Oran Berry and popping it into his mouth. He chewed it a couple times, before swallowing the berry with a quiet gulp. He pawed at an arm, casting his gaze down and meeting her eyes with a skeptical frown.

"… Why are you doing this after everything I've done to you and your island?"

"Because even if you're a mean-spirited cheat, nobody deserves to be left beaten down and all alone like that," Nida said. "Much less after going through something like what they did to your wings."

Darzin remained silent and looked away. Nida wasn't fully sure what to say after that given that she was expecting the Dragonite to say something back, but perhaps this was a sign that she needed to take the lead with keeping the conversation going.

"How did you even get here?"

"… It was that Kommo-o and that Sylveon that were chasing after you," Darzin muttered, shaking his head. "After you left, they revealed that I'd been going after Lugia and framed me as being a spy for the Empire."

The Dragonite turned his head up and stared off into the sky. First vacantly, as an increasingly bitter twinge came over his face.

"Elilan must've known all along," he huffed. "He talked the Board into sending me here so that he could toy with me."

Nida blinked in surprise. There was clearly quite a story behind whatever had happened between Darzin, Elilan, and the rest of the Board. At the same time, she wasn't really sure what she could do to help his mood at the moment. She averted her gaze, giving an awkward shuffle of her forepaws.

"Yeah, I… know the two Pokémon you're talking about," she murmured. "I'm sorry to hear that."

Nida hesitated. A part of her wasn't comfortable just turning away and leaving Darzin behind after everything that had happened to him. At this rate, it wasn't hard to imagine that that horrid Marowak might be right and that Darzin really wouldn't last the week with the way the prisoners ganged up on him.

… At the same time, Darzin wasn't exactly a friend of theirs. For all she knew, he'd turn on him the day after when his wounds were a bit more healed. And Pladur likely wasn't wrong that getting close to him would likely draw the prisoners' ire onto them, too…

She just didn't know what to do.

"H-Hey! Let go of me!"

Nida's ears flicked as she briefly saw Darzin straighten up and look past her. She whirled around, where there in the corner was a large group of guards pulling Kiran and Pladur away. Her eyes widened as she saw the guards shoving back Pyry and Albert. The Nidorina raised her barbs in a panic and she started hurrying after her teammates and their captors.

"Ah! Kiran! Pladur! What's-?!"

"Not so fast."

Nida felt something hard catch her under her chest and nearly tripped, before she looked down and saw a long bone held out in front of her. As she followed it back to its owner, she saw that dreaded, dark-scaled Marowak was there. Nida tensed up as Junius pulled his bone back and idly spun it around, before planting it upright against the ground.

"It's your lucky day, Nidorina," he said. "You and your friends are getting transferred."

Nida looked over at Kiran and Pladur as they were marched over to the steps leading out of the prison yard. Much to her surprise, Crom and the rest of her teammates were already gathered at the top of the steps. The other prisoners in the yard were staring at them, with a few murmuring dark-sounding remarks like 'poor bastards' that reached her ears. She looked back at Junius and dug her feet into the ground as her heart quickened in her chest.

"What do you mean, 'transferred'?"

"It means, you're being moved to a different part of the prison," the Marowak answered. "You can either come along quietly or I'll drag out of here. Your choice."

The Marowak tightened his grip on his bone and idly batted it against his free hand as Nida subconsciously shuffled back. There was no way that anything good would come of going along with this. But she'd seen this Pokémon smack around Hess on his own, and with all of her friends already in the guards' clutches, just what could she do?

She hesitated for a moment, before Junius stepped forward and she felt his thumb claw dig under her pelt. The Marowak grabbed onto her shoulder, before marching her along towards the others. She tried to wrench herself free, but after the first few steps, she stopped fighting things, until she'd been marched over to her friends at the top of the stairs. She cast a glance over towards Crom, as the young Druddigon was standing up stiff and wide-eyed.

Tak! Tak!

Junius tapped his bone against the ground for attention. He turned his gaze out over Team Traveller and the gathered guards, before motioning ahead at the entrance to the prison with a sharp harrumph.

"Come on, we're running late as it is."

Nida uneasily shuffled forward with her friends. The whole time, her head spun and heart raced as they began making their way up the stairs and back into the prison and questions she couldn't answer kept repeating over and over again in her mind:

What was happening? Why were she and her teammates being singled out?

And what were these Pokémon going to do to them?



Author's Notes:

- Razbira se, che da! (Разбира се, че да!) - Bulgarian: "Of course (it is)!" / "Of course, absolutely!" (BGN/PCGN 2013 Romanization)
- Tá sé seo áiféiseach - Irish: "This is ridiculous"
- Wiem o tym! - Polish: "I know that!"
- Tar anois, a Dhaid - Irish: "Come on, dad", lit. "Come now, dad"
- (¿)Cómo salió todo? - Spanish: "How’d everything go/turn out?"
- (¿)Qué estás haciendo? - Spanish: "What are you doing (right now)?"
 

Tango

Mascot of the Doduo Alliance
Location
beyond the Nexus
Pronouns
He/him
Partners
  1. doduo
  2. doduo-shiny
Hey everybody, it’s been a little while since Virgil and I last bumped this story, and we built up… uh… quite a few more reviews than we were expecting to get in the intervening timeframe. We’re not complaining about it, though it means that the responses this time around will generally be on the more condensed side relative to normal:
Fair enough. Glad to see the reviews are coming in! :okgon:

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Though glad to hear that the start of the chapter landed well for you.
'Landed'. I see what you did there. :mewlulz:

That’s something that you’ll have to read along to find out. >:V
I look forward to it. :quag:

And cute and fluffy.
:lugiyay:
Quite right!

More or less, yeah. It was our guess as to how Pokémon could continue to live within Mystery Dungeons if the floors periodically get blown away every now and then.
Makes sense.

We went and slipped in a brief remark from him here about that, since it’s cute/funny enough to be worth throwing in.
I actually went back to the chapter and hunted the extra tidbit you added. Makes sense he wouldn't understand how high the sky was, focusing instead on the color and clouds! :mewlulz:

Glad I could inspire a small improvement! :okgon:

This part, we won’t be doing, since Pleo being flightless here is very much a feature and not bug. You’ll see why in future chapters.
Indeed!

Almost as if his egg came about in not fully natural circumstances, huh?
Oh that's neat! :eyes:

I get the feeling there will be more to this later! :veelove:

:okgon:

Yes, but at the same time, he’s still babby and has no idea of how to wield that power just yet. So ‘watch over him while he’s weak and vulnerable’ is the operating assumption here.
Hmm. Still came across as the characters being a little short sighted in the moment, though they did come around later, so it seems ok.

I could buy it, though Hatteras isn’t quite a slouch as a fighter himself, so that probably wouldn’t end well for the attempted assassin.
Ooo! Neat! :eyes:

Implying that they’re not already together now.
:wowzard: Woah! Not going to lie, that's one of the things I'm looking forward to the most to see!

Seeing Pleo learn and grow is another big one. And no, I don't mind how long the story takes as long as it does a good job. In fact, the long length is preferable if done well! (And so far, it's done well!)

We went with a different route and attached a speech tag here.
:okgon:

Yeah, it’s also an introduction to how not everyone in this setting is looking forward to Pleo’s return.
Great choice to include it! Makes readers wonder and get curious. (including me!) :quag:

Hold onto those thoughts there.
Have to hand it to you, your comments are making me reaaaaly curious about plot stuff! :veelove:

We’ve considered something like that in the past, but considering how much work creating a wiki like that would take, we decided not to.
It does sound like quite a bit considering the scope of your fic. Better to do it early on and add to it vs trying to set it up at this point. Totally fair! :okgon:

It’s because he’s the most panicked and jumped the gun there.
That tracks.

Yeah, and you’ll see this explored on both sides of the divide more in the future.
Oooh! That sounds fascinating! :eyes:

Glad to hear that their portrayal felt believable to you there. The characterization in this story is something that Virgil and I are particularly proud of.
As well you both should! Been a fine read so far!

That’s a bit of an artifact of this story using Aerith and Bob naming. Teja is a masculine name… in South Asia. While Marley was chosen due to the fact that it’s a homophone to ‘marli’, the term for a doe rabbit in Watership Down.
Ooo! Neat details regarding name selection! Thanks for sharing. :quag:

Well, some of them certainly would, yes. :copyka:
My goodness! A foe stronger than BEDTIME??! :wowzard:

I'm scared to see how strong the villains they are going to face are! :copyka:

Nah, this is just a Watership Down reference in this story, along with a subtle hint as to what the seedbed for civilization in this setting was.
Ahh! Very clever.

And how considering how long this story has become. :copyka:
Well, hey. If it's good, it deserves length. I'm looking forward to seeing how you flesh the various things out in your world. :quag:

Fortunately, Cenn is a bit better-natured than that. And any budding villain tendencies would’ve gotten bogged down in the not-too-distant future by… well, you’ll see when you get there.
:eyes:

Yeah, but mostly I was just inventing a funny little script. I didn't ACTUALLY think he would become a villain! :mewlulz:

We went and fixed these.
:quag:

Yup! One of the benefits of having a character that quite literally came from under a rock is that we get to have someone to show off the workings of the world to along with the reader. Even if he’s not the only character of that ilk that will pop up in this story.
Certainly seems to get the job done. :okgon:

Hold onto those thoughts as well.
:wowzard:

We went and dropped in a version of your suggestions here.

Ditto here.

And here.

It’s meant to be “make it to the sparring partner with Pleo”. But we tweaked that there.
:okgon:

Assuming that she fought at full strength, anyways.
Ah, yes. She probably would not need to fight at full strength. It IS only training, after all.

Nida: “Oh boy, no pressure there.”
:sweats~1:
:mewlulz:

I mean, I wouldn’t be terribly surprised if Kiran was scheduled to do the honors at some point, but yeah. Pleo not really flying much almost certainly influenced the choice of sparring partner.
:okgon:

And we’ll be looking forward to it! Thanks again for the review!” ^^
You're very welcome! :quag:
 
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