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Oh, oh! I have a big worldbuilding fail that I see a lot of novice writers (and even some experienced ones) do! But first, I want to respond to teleporting. I think teleporting is something that I work with a lot in my work. Hands of Creation pretty much relies on teleportation so the story...

Oh, okay! So that's what we're doing tonight. -- All things considered, this chapter was definitely a sudden change of pace. I think one thing that's kind of interesting about it is, from a narrative perspective and from a blind reader's perspective, this theoretically could have happened...

Opening with Firestorm being shot down. What a shame, though hey, at least he’s getting a lot stronger. It’s interesting to see Swift being the most level-headed one of the bunch. Considering what I know about him, with how he’s generally the most academic and upstanding in terms of doing more...

Cell, cell, cells, room, room... -- Now this was an intense chapter, but in a quieter way than they usually go. This is another instance where first person plays in your favor, because for things that are more difficult to accurately describe, or for things that are more descriptive the less...

Chapter 14 – Too Late Owen had barely slept last night—nobody had answered his questions when he asked. They had said, what are you talking about? Maybe it was a lapse in memory. Sometimes evolution can change the mind slightly. Gahi is just confused. He’ll sort it out. Don’t worry, Owen. You...

Ah, this is an interesting take on Mew. A far cry from the cheerful, playful depiction of most iterations of the species. -- This was a very exciting chapter! All action, with a lot of introspection in the middle for what to do next. Jade was definitely thinking in bullet-time for a lot of...

This was an exciting chapter that didn't take time to dillydally with any training shenanigans this time. Great! And it in general hit a lot of good beats, showed that the team was getting more and more competent with taking and disrupting the Rockets... Yeah. I like where this is all going, and...

Hello, everyone! This is my entry for a 2019 one-shot competition over in bulba, but now that it's been a week, I'm publishing it here, too! I hope you enjoy. It's a bit more on the experimental side in terms of the premise, at least compared to the usual thing that I write. Though it might...

Nah it’s a Battle Royale before that was actually invented. -- So, despite this being the chapter with ‘ALL THE PLOT’ I’d argue it was more focused near the end than anything, since, once again, we have more training/battling going on. Now, I’ll admit that we’ve got a small milestone ahead...

Ah, and here we go, another little interlude chapter. I think these have been generally good for the flow of the story, and compared to the opening chapters, I think these were paced a lot better in terms of being able to follow everything and actually getting a good feel for the characters, to...

Chapter 13 – A Place to Call Home Traversing Fae, Fae Forest was a calming experience, for the most part. The wild Pokémon were no match for Amia’s flames, and Owen managed to take on a few as well. He used the aggressors as practice for his vines. He had learned a new technique this way...

Ahaha... I think you accidentally spoiled it in-narrative before Jade would have known. -- Okay! So, this was a nice chapter. I liked where you went with it, and as usual, the action was spliced in with development. Obviously the most interesting segment was the part with Mewtwo, and how...

OH COME ON! -- Anyway, that aside, this is an interesting chapter that covers a few story beats in rapid succession. I'll go over those later, but I don't have anything particularly remarkable to comment on other than the fact that this is the first time we see Chibi in a truly vulnerable...

Chapter 12 - Twisted Minds Anam, and only Anam, heard the deep boom of metal bells. The Abandoned Temple—the original name lost to the ages—stood four stories high, despite only having a single story inside. The building was made out of marble with intricate designs along the walls in the...

I'm glad you like him! He's definitely a fun one to read about, so I hope you enjoy his appearances. Hard to follow, huh? Yeah, it was definitely an explosive opening. Maybe I could look into clarifying the opening a little, though it's definitely hard to judge since you're unfamiliar with...

Good progress chapter! You didn't dabble too long with the training this time, either. I think you had a good balance of that, and a bit of world building for how Protect works in this world. That's pretty clever, though thirty seconds, oh boy. I wonder how fast-paced battles go if that's...

Finally, some payoff! Took a while, but this chapter was well worth it, I'd say. We've already got the sabotage mission to thwart Raikou, and I have some overall thoughts about this at the end, but my initial impression of this chapter was a nice little good-job on getting this little arc...

Gonna use this quote to zero in on the fact that this battle gave me serious flashback vibes to literally the chapter before. We had a fight scene opening that one and a fight scene opening this one and aaaa it's just a repeat and it was hard for me to not skim over it. Yeah, they're getting...

Special Episode 1 – Storm Lightning shattered the sky. A squadron of Pokémon consisting of a Flareon, Delphox, Salazzle, and Rapidash stopped to avert their eyes. A thunderous blast deafened them, and the ground trembled when a follow-up explosion—this time, one of a tree crashing down—dwarfed...

Understandable. Sorry that my upload rate is a bit on the fast side. I've slowed down for your sake and other readers, but I can't possibly slow down more than how I'm publishing on FFN for current chapters, so--once every two weeks is the slowest I can go. Hopefully it's still possible to catch...