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“Code Gray in Wing 2C!” The flashlight ignited in one fluid motion, I like how this feels so like a hospital announcement/code word. However in regards to the flashlight unless the lot’s being set on fire, or a traditional lamp with oil to catch, I’d recommend swapping ignite for something...

Just tossed up a review of "Do psychic types dream of electric sheep"'s prologue. the review It ran for 1400 words per the counter.

Electric sheep review Well this is one way to be dropped into a mystery dungeon setting. Without Mew, or whatever Legend is there to soften the transition/landing between expected and no… It does show the horror of what is basically child abduction, mind wiping, and the like. Thanks for sharing...

Honestly I just wrote this to write it... (After Pens grand sweep of thirty fics in one shot... yeah... I'm not winning top spot and more than content just to play to play and get some quality reading in) As thanks for borrowing one of my bit characters and using him so well I reviewed...

A wonderful fic of familiar warped by outre... I never thought I'd read a mix match of pokemon, misc pop-culture and Alice in Wonderland in my life... but here we are. The whole was a wonderful light-hearted romp that I enjoyed from start to finish. While I was not too familiar with the 'mon...

Just finished my review of continental divides chapter one... my review Too... tired.... to mature adult.... and.... word count... also it qualifies for this weeks bonus

review/analysis/whatever of chapter one.... Still there. Somewhere. I’d rec “They were still there, somewhere” While I get the idea is to show Nat’s disjointed, panicked thought process a hair of clarity is lost. It also can be dropped, no damage done to comprehension either way. She had...

Thanks for taking the time. And I apologize in advanced for the readability issues. I’m working on re-doing a number of my fic (and acquiring a beta) since it’s been drawn to my attention how bad some of the structural/clarity problems are. I had not realized they were compromising readability...

Luminary, review... Yes I copped out at page eight... but it's a review and going further is going to require input from the author on if they want me to do so with what.. So I cut it off so they could decide, if they want to, and left the lot open ended. It's still a detailed break down of...

A/N: Alright, as a heads up I copy and pasted this story into my word doc so I could work on it off line. For the sake of total transparency I'm letting you know I did this and I promise to delete it as soon as I'm done. I got up to page eight, saw I was repeating myself, and decided to stop...

Finished a review last night. Word counter pegged it at 2600 words despite all the stars- review for the fic by fashion queen That should put me at 5.

Part reaction by read part summery, my review of your first chapter. Alright while we open up with the scenario, it seems more event and character centric, wheeling through facts of what’s going on, and the character’s name/profession before branching out to talk about kid-piolet program of the...

Title: You could never swing that dagger (co)Author(s): bodysharing and westerngenre ao3 link Teen, there's discussion of child abuse, torture, and brain washing and PTSD/flashbacks, Rec'ers note: Category: Non-pokemon, Legend of Zelda BOTW Genre: Adventure Status: Veeery slow...

Thanks for your insight. Yeah I need to clarify a few things in the text. I'm one of those... Look at my SHINY IDEA sorts who will put up ten chapters, wait for complaints/responses, than mow over the text with a lawnmower to address them. So expect some edits soon. I'm actually getting...

Hopefully my narrative holds up to the challenge, and I apologize for my many weaknesses that exist in my prose. I've plans to reach out after the contest to see if there is a beta willing to team up with me as my grammar, particularly spelling, coma, and run-ons, are a crippling weakness of...

By sheer chance what I picked qualified for week one and week three all at once and was unsure how you wanted to work it in... Thanks for clearing up the wording.

Now what do I do with your body Well considering OSJ's love of plants I vote mulching... we've garden materials to hide the lot in or at least a surefire catch of shovels if we can find their supply shed. Oh haha I might as well let you know to stop yourself while you're ahead; Drowning is on...

I've a new review... was filling festive and picked it based off of the title... While set during the hol's it's more an introspective with a slap dash of adventure... As it had no reviews (now remedied) I think it qualifies for the "phone" bonus, if so, please tab it onto my total...

Laughs. I’m guessing the trainer’s mom was not expecting to get another “kid” in the house when her’s went on his journey and came back.. successfully, or not, however it went. While you establish there’s only three parties, the mom, perry (trainer) and deli the over use of he hurts this...