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Chapter 20 review Really poor directional sense and bad placement of self, and a perchance for climbing, I’m starting to wonder if the man’s a cat. All we’d have to do is confirm a fear of water then we can toss another one on the headcanon pile. And to commemorate the event I will see if I can...

Having met my first challenge and being an utter glutton for punishment I think I will use Rookidee as a means to have others gently nudge me towards completing my others. (Also I haven't participated yet and been meaning to, there's that) 26 years, been meaning to get at least to chapter 25...

I look forward to it!

Congrats on the progress. Better late than never right?

Hello, I'm done and wanted to share. My thoughts on Obsession, though the chapter counter is wrong (my word kept "auto-correcting" and scrambling the chapter headings among other fun things when I transferred the forum to word to do line by line) I did complete the requisite chapters 5 chapters...

Review of chapter 19 to present chapter 22 ENTRY 5 of ANIVERSITY EVENT (words 600) Hm really father and son aren’t that far apart with their creator modes. Interest modes? Anyway, it sounds like he’s trying to recreate something that Jir’ saw in the exhibit. Helen’s got a point. If she’s...

Review of 16 ENTRY 4 ANNIVERSARY EVENT (words 516) I wonder as Jir keeps chasing the city mouse lifestyle if he’s aware of the cat at the end of the tale… Or if he’d even care at this point. Hm seems as if Veronica’s dad is something of a similar cut of Jir’s dad, down to the earth and a...

Review of chapter 15 ENTRY 3 for ANNIVERSARY EVENT (300 words) Early bird much Jir’? I imagine a factory like Jir’s father’s running from dawn to dusk so that must be obscenely early. (says the nightowl) Personally, I think Helen’s trying, to connect with Jir’ a bit, she’s at least paying...

Review of chapter 14 ENTRY 2 for ANNIVERSARY EVENT. (280 words) Hm I wish you’d have given a few examples of him doting to contrast with his puppy eye pity ploy a little rather than Jir’s hear-say… but it’d probably break tone too much to dig into it too much. You can hear Jir’ just wailing...

Yeah since my writing fic i am working reviewing cover to coveratthe moment has wildly has variable chapter length definitly need to know the word limits myself...

Review of chapter 13 ENTRY 1 for the ANNIVERSARY EVENT Word count 270 (with response to your review reply) Always a pleasure to go over your work. I’ve plans to get to chapter 20 and then tackle your Arecas work… um would you be able to toss me a link via PM though? It’s easier to manage to...

Chapter 18 To quote potter it always looks cooler than it actually in person. Hana’s learning this now.. a bit shocking, but alright. I guess guess the move would be a more trainer centric eye spy and easy to handle while on foot. Though I suggest Hana make it a neon sign, a big bright one...

hi I come bearing gifts chapter 17 line by line reaction Chapter 17 No, way wait, if hopip wins the combat we can have fresh muton with breakfast… though considering typing they might be having toasted salad. Never mind Leon, try to help out I guess. You know it’s interesting that Leon’s...

Oh gods... so many reviews to do so little time... then (dramatic music) editing. Hope to be around and about a bit more than my recent norm but we'll see how it goes.

Hi, I believe I have something of yours, enjoy. The others will come as time permits. (And welcome back to the writing scene though it's a hair belated!) (Ok a toupee belated.. sentiment still holds) Review/reactions for chapters 10, 11, 12, Chapter 10 It’s weird to hear Jir’ be excited...

Perhaps a compilation of poorly applied tropes and ideas of how to fix would be a better angle rather than bashing? While I get venting has it's place (Sue's are perhaps my least favorite aspect of fandom unless used as satire and I have a personal list that if enough lines get ticked off I...

Hii back again here are chapters 14-16 CHAPTER 14 The way the roof takes a beating I suspect something did the damage rather than nature. Having come up from a looong binge of horror/paranormal shows having something pace above the roof doing damage down and Morty’s proximity… I’m mildly...

an: ran through Grammarly and edited 2.20.2022 “Drink.” “I’m fine.” “You look one minute away from heatstroke.” She was only a little red and maybe getting sunburn, maybe. But it wasn’t that bad. She huffed at his back while he dug out his phone, face twisting to something like hostile as...

hi here for catnip. I tackled the first two chapters and did a line-by-line reaction with your requests in mind. Chapter 1 Loving how we go from “what time is it?” mentality to a “whaaaat”, it’s a nice use and springboard for an amnesiac heroes tale. So from the wake-up, we discover no man is...