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It seems that you've misunderstood - Ogawa isn't Arcean. He was just a criminal for hire who was hired by Miriam (Red's stalker lady), who's the one that was Arcean. Thanks for the review, both off you! I hope you'll like what's to come once I get out of my current slump and continue the story.

Hey! I've been meaning to check this out for a looong time, and the Blitz gave the perfect excuse (even if my review's turning out too short to qualify for points). aw this reminded me how our old dog would start biting our shoes when she got hyper. core memory unlocked things learned today...

Hi! Here's the review for chapters 3-6, like we agreed. Two instances of "laying" that should be "lying". That's interesting - it feels like she's not just talking about three-headed dragons in general, but Hydreigon in specific. I guess she comes from some alternate version of our world that...

Hey! Catching up on the latest chapter (5) for Blitz. Let's go. This sentence seems to be missing a period. Were? I was going to say that "?!" is correct over "??", but actually googling it it's trying to tell me "?!" is also wrong, but that only using "!" would be correct. I'll just pretend...

Hey there! I decided to catch up with this story for the Blitz. I read chapters 11-15, and here are my thoughts. I like that the train accommodates differently sized Pokémon. I like the whole section describing the train, really. I appreciate that the species of the World-Savers get reiterated...

Hey there! Since I appreciated your review on Hunter, Haunted and I'm curious in general how a cool dude like you writes, I decided to check out the first chapter of this story. Let's get to it. oh... inc... The trademarks are funny, but does this imply that only they get to use the terms...

Hey there! I was recommended this fic by Bench on the Discord some time ago, and the Blitz made for a great time to check it out. I've read chapters 1-3, and here are my thoughts. I think you have a very solid handle on characterization and dialogue. The characters feel alive and it's easy to...

Hey there! I remember you recommending your stories back when I asked for some recommendations, and this was one of them. As the Review Blitz gives the perfect excuse to check it out, here I am. Let's get to it. So something I noticed throughout the story was that the placement of the...

Kohath's eyes widened, and he dodged to the side to narrowly avoid the poisonous sludge. So he actually expects me to fight beasts on my own, Kohath thought. I am not doing that. But fighting him does not seem any better. I have to make sure that he will not get that opportunity. "This is your...

hiiiiii :333 looks like i did get this chapter in before the year ended! anyway: you should note that i went back and changed some things in the previous chapter. what it is is mentioned at the top of the post. i don't think you actually need to reread the change itself if you can just...

Ohhh my goddd I'm so happy reading your comments 😊😊😊 Thank you so much for the kind words! Yeah, the whole HELIX thing is admittedly a mess. Little Helix being tied to HELIX is basically 100% just because of the fic's origins in TPP, which is why Little Helix isn't even going to be a character...

Hey there! This is a story I've been working on since October. I'm having some doubts about whether it's worth finishing, so I would really appreciate some feedback, specifically on whether or not you feel for the protagonist and want him to succeed, and if not, what could help change that...

Okay! I'm breaking out the capitalization for this one. --- Hunter, Haunted Synopsis: Thinking he'd successfully gotten away with yet another ritualistic murder, Ichiro "Red" Akai is shocked to discover his latest victim roaming the earth once more - as a yamask. To keep his crimes from being...

Kohath glared back. The bird was starting to annoy him. "What would you have me do? Fistfight beasts wielding powers of fire and earth? I owe you no debt, and... I am starting to doubt if anyone here does." He raised his voice and glanced around at the others. "Are you going to let this bird...

As the bird commanded his followers to attack, Kohath stood there with arms crossed, not moving. While he might have technically been able to help by circling the battlefield and attacking the humans on the other side, that would still likely get him targeted by mon as they rushed to defend...

Hey there! I'm here for Catnip. Here are my thoughts on the story. Another Professor & AI fic, huh? Guessing you're really into their concept as characters. It does, though, mean that I will again have fewer feedback to give as some of the thoughts I would have otherwise had were already...

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EDIT: The part in this chapter where has been changed. Now he hiiiiiiii besties i am still alive yes and i have been very slowly writing. here is chapter 14. don't ask me when the next one's coming. it might be this year or it might be next year. it probably will not be the year after that...

Kohath raised a brow. Well, now he'd directly been asked. And the bird had clearly alluded to his physique, not any beasts he might have had with him in some of those strange spherical containers. He wanted him to fight with his fists. That was clearly foolish, but he did want to know what this...

Kohath's brows raised in surprise as the old man climbed on the stage and gave his accusation. There were two sides to the story now. It reminded Kohath of the many arguments he'd had to settle during his time as tribe chief. Well, which one was telling the truth? The bird or the old man? Had...