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But of course. Am I proud? Somewhat. Should I be? Probably not. My writing career is a farce. Also Amby got me with "Kirby Star Allies."

Hey all! This was made for the Thousand Roads one-shot competition once, and now it's been edited to be even better. Hope you enjoy this divine comedy! I'll rate this one Everyone, with some fantasy and implied violence. The Godslayer With a hat, a grin, and ultimate power He challenged Our...

Chapter 48 – Flames in the Dark Going from Hot Spot Cave to the southern corner of the world took quite a while. The sun was not far from kissing the horizon. It wouldn’t be long until they were above the Chasm of the Void; even in the incoming twilight, they expected to see the blinding...

Chapter 47 – All’s Well If it wasn’t for the fact that Hot Spot Road was rarely traveled, bystanders would’ve reported them to the Hearts as mutants roaming the world to be contained—or neutralized. Rhys gulped. That wouldn’t do well for Mispy’s psyche in particular. “Th-that’s right,” Rhys...

Thanks again, Pen! Seems there were a lot of criticisms this time around, though I do like that the one part that you had a lot of praise for... was something that had been added from scratch in a more recent edit, compared to the other parts of the chapter that I didn't rewrite quite as...

Wow, this is incredibly different compared to the first time I read through this. An entirely new prologue! Is the prelude from the first time gone/integrated into this, more or less? Either way, I'll definitely consider this one to be a hell of a lot more interesting, since it really gets into...

Chapter 46 – Weapon “Is he still sulking?” Jerry said. “Looks like it,” Star said. Owen paced through Hot Spot Cave’s main road, waiting for everybody else to settle in and discuss their next steps. Enet was bathing with Gahi and Amia in the cave’s nearby hot springs—courtesy of Zena and Amia...

Special Episode 4 - Revise the Moment Rotwood Fen was a cursed place. The ground was covered in a thin, patchy layer of dark grass. Surrounding this grass was black mud, fungus, and grime, cold to the touch. Rocks were covered in mold and moss, various shades of gray and bluish-black, or some...

A) Count me in for Ash Betrayal. B) I am forever bound to work at all times and am therefore always available. C) I'm open for any positioning.

Chapter 45 – The Balance of Power Everyone, aside from Anam, his spirits, and Nevren, was gathered around at the large, rocky cavern. The warmer air made it difficult for non-Fire Types to fight for long; Step, sensing this unfair advantage, breathed out a frosty cloud, cooling the room in a...

I think I'm going to add a remark that he doesn't behave like one from Alex or something, because you're right, he doesn't. It's intentional but I should probably acknowledge it in-universe more... directly. So, I actually sort of imply this waaaay later on why, but I think that's a good idea...

Hiya Desert! You can thank @zion of arcadia for tossing this story into Catnip for a review, and that's what this is for! Now, overall, I want to say that this narrative style is very prose heavy rather than dialogue, and as a personal preference, that does make things difficult for me to get...

Chapter 44 - Overconfident Owen, Gahi, Enet, and Amia all returned from the Poison Guardian’s realm. They smelled of the toxic swamp’s noxious fumes, but thankfully didn’t take much of it with them beyond that. “Brr—what a cold draft,” Amia said, rubbing her arms. “I don’t think Hot Spot Cave...

Chapter 43 – Holy Poison Owen didn’t know what it was like to slog through poisoned gunk until that day. It was thicker than water, but not quite as thick as mud. Between his scales and his thighs, it had a jelly-like feel to it in some parts, and a vague resemblance to the slime of Emily’s...

Chapter 42 – Royalty “Y’know, it’s kinda hard ter hate this place,” Manny said. “Nice air, strong trees… Could do without all the spiderwebs, though.” Arachno Forest was brimming with life. The trees were thick with dark leaves and strong trunks; very little light reached the forest floor. The...

Chapter 41 – Frozen Over The northwestern corner of the world was covered in a perpetual, thick layer of ice. The white field was dotted with black rocks and sloping hills of snow and ice. The ground wasn’t stable, and there were a few incidents early on where Valle had fallen into thinner...

Hey, Wind! This was an interesting story and I think what really gave it some staying power in particular was the ending. The reveal itself, in hindsight, was a little cliche--kinda like those stories of a hero talking to a child about some event in the past, not revealing that they are that...

Thanks for the review, Pen! Good feedback like before all around. For some clarifications... Yes, this is an early problem that I have, and I think part of it comes with being a little light on epithets combined with having too few physical descriptors sprinkled in, and so on. During my...

Chapter 40 – Regrets and Reconciliation Gawen watched silently as Demitri and Mispy recalled their past, or at least a small portion of it. They remembered bits and pieces of their first lives. Perhaps not all of it, but enough to understand exactly what had happened to them, and why they had...

ACT II – A Stubborn Ego The Hall of Origin was made of pure, white, shining tile. Light shined from above, radiating off of tall ceilings. The light bounced off the walls and illuminated the floor. The passageways were so wide that an entire squad of Owens could march, wing to wing, and have...