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CuteBunnyGirl

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She/Her
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Author’s note: This is my first PMD fic, please don’t criticize it too harshly and remember to be constructive!

Content warnings: Deception, Betrayal, Major character death, Slight mentions of blood and violence. (Some of these will only apply closer to the end of the story) The story is rated T for Teen. The fic also includes major spoilers for Pokemon Legends: Arceus and possibly the Mystery Dungeon games.




Chapter 1 - An Unfamiliar World

Akari woke up, however, she felt something was off. As she looked around, she could see an autumnal forest. As she walked around the forest looking for a clue as to where she was, she could notice she appeared to be somewhat shorter than before.

“Is this some kind of dream?” She thought to herself.

She pinched herself to see if she would wake up, yet, she did not. Instead, she realized that her hands had somehow transformed into white paws. As she saw her reflection in a nearby puddle, she could clearly see something she was not expecting. Instead of her normal human body, she saw an Oshawott.

Just what had happened to her? She woke up in the middle of a forest as a pokemon, and the strangest part of all, she didn’t even remember how she got there. In fact, she couldn’t really remember anything besides her name and the fact she used to be a human.

“Wait… What?!” She asked. However, there was no one to answer her questions, at least that was what she thought.

Suddenly she heard something. It was the sounds of footsteps approaching her. She looked behind herself, only to see a menacing Garchomp right behind her, its sharp claws ready to tear her to pieces. Its merciless gaze could intimidate even the toughest of opponents, and Akari seemed to have no choice but to accept her fate.

“Help!!!” She screamed in fear, as she knew running would be of no use.

Suddenly, the Garchomp seemed to fade away, only leaving behind a white fox-like pokemon with wispy tufts of fur. Still speechless, she could only stare at this new pokemon. It resembled a Zorua, which could have meant the Garchomp was an illusion.

“Did I scare you?” The strange Zorua asked with a mischievous smirk.

“What is even happening? First I become a pokemon and then a weird talking Zorua tries to attack me disguised as a Garchomp.”

“Oh, I was just trying to prank you… Wait, what did you say about becoming a pokemon?”

Akari was unsure if it was a good idea to tell the Zorua that she used to be a human. However, maybe it could actually prove useful to her in case the Zorua knew of a way to help her. Eventually, she decided to say:

“Well, I was a human until I randomly woke up as an Oshawott.”

“Are you really saying you were a human?! I’ve heard stories of them coming from other worlds. They come here usually to save this world.”

“Well… do you know of a way I can return to my world?”

“I’m not sure… maybe the Steelhammer Guild could know of a way to help you. By the way, may I ask what your name is?”

“I’m Akari, what about you?”

The Zorua seemed surprised by her name at first, before finally replying:

“You may call me Shade.”

“And what is this Steelhammer Guild?”

“It’s a guild led by Tinkaton, do you want me to lead you there? This forest has some dangerous pokemon, you could get hurt if you go alone.”

Something about Shade seemed suspicious, yet there was also another feeling she felt when looking at him. A feeling of familiarity and vague recollection. It felt almost as if they had somehow met before, but how was that possible? She had never met a talking Zorua before, right? Eventually, she ignored the feeling of suspicion and replied:

“Sure, I’ll follow you.”
 
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Review:
Chapter 1 - An Unfamiliar World

A new fic? Ooo and its a super short chapter I see!

Lets jump in for a surprise review!

Author’s note: This is my first PMD fic, please don’t criticize it too harshly and remember to be constructive!
I'll do my usual here. I don't think there should be any issues?

Content warnings: Deception, Betrayal, Major character death, Slight mentions of blood and violence. The story is rated T for Teen.
Wow sounds like this starts off with an act of betrayal that ends in death of the one betrayed?! :wowzard:



Chapter 1 - An Unfamiliar World
Solid opening chapter title.

Akari woke up, however, she felt something was off.
Akari. Nice name. And yes, something is most certainly off. You are in mystery land now!

As she looked around, she could see an autumnal forest.
Autumnal is an actual word?! You learn something new every day! :wowzard:

That said, what a nifty word to describe it. My mind is flooded with trees and vibrant leaves. What a cool way to use minimal words to pull out such vividness! :veelove:

It might be nice if there was some kind of nod to Akari finding the place beautiful though. Also, what time of day is it? I'm imagining it being in the afternoon with golden rays of light breaking through the thin barrier of leaves after some had fallen. The floor littered with vibrant leaves in combination with the ones on the trees.
As she walked around the forest looking for a clue as to where she was, she could notice she appeared to be somewhat shorter than before.
Hate to break it to you but...
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“Is this some kind of dream?” She thought to herself.
Waking up in a strange vibrantly beautiful AUTUMNAL forest doesn't sound like such a bad dream to me!

She pinched herself to see if she would wake up, yet, she did not. Instead, she realized that her hands had somehow transformed into white paws.
Yep, definitely a wizard.

From here I feel like there are a few possible reactions from her:
1. white paws? OH how cute! :mewlulz:
2. White... paws? What the...
3. I'm not dreaming and I have white paws. Well, sanity was good while it lasted at least.

As she saw her reflection in a nearby puddle, she could clearly see something she was not expecting. Instead of her normal human body, she saw an Oshawott.
Not a bad choice as far as these things go!

Just what had happened to her? She woke up in the middle of a forest as a pokemon, and the strangest part of all, she didn’t even remember how she got there. In fact, she couldn’t really remember anything besides her name and the fact she used to be a human.
What an experience that would be. At least she is somewhere beautiful.

“Wait… What?!” She asked. However, there was no one to answer her questions, at least that was what she thought.
Someone is there it seems!

Suddenly she heard something. It was the sounds of footsteps approaching her. She looked behind herself, only to see a menacing Garchomp right behind her, its sharp claws ready to tear her to pieces.
THAT would be a BIT scary! :wowzard:

Its merciless gaze could intimidate even the toughest of opponents, and Akari seemed to have no choice but to accept her fate.
I'm surprised she doesn't just full-on faint here. Being SURPRISED by a Garchomp right behind her would be beyond terrifying!

“Help!!!” She screamed in fear, as she knew running would be of no use.
Yeah, she can't outrun it on those comparatively short stubby legs...

She most certainly can't fight it either and probably doesn't even really know how in her body yet!

Yelling help though? I guess that's probably the best she could do. Either that or beg the Garchomp not to devour her whole.

Suddenly, the Garchomp seemed to fade away, only leaving behind a white fox-like pokemon with wispy tufts of fur.
I'm already feeling happier for her.

Sounds like an illusion!

Still speechless, she could only stare at this new pokemon. It resembled a Zorua, which could have meant the Garchomp was an illusion.
Nice that she can figure these kinds of things out!

“Did I scare you?” The strange Zorua asked with a mischievous smirk.
Is it bad that I want to full-on punch that Zorua in the face?

“What is even happening? First I become a pokemon and then a weird talking Zorua tries to attack me disguised as a Garchomp.”
Tries to attack? I'm not sure I would go that far, but she was scared so badly that its easy to assume she is not thinking very clearly right now.

“Oh, I was just trying to prank you… Wait, what did you say about becoming a pokemon?”
Just trying to prank? Scaring someone half to death is NOT funny! :screm:

Akari was unsure if it was a good idea to tell the Zorua that she used to be a human. However, maybe it could actually prove useful to her in case the Zorua knew of a way to help her. Eventually, she decided to say:

“Well, I was a human until I randomly woke up as an Oshawott.”
She is just going to jump right into looking for a way out? It's impressive how fast she can shift gears here!

“Are you really saying you were a human?! I’ve heard stories of them coming from other worlds. They come here usually to save this world.”
Usually? Now I'm wondering about the times that ISN'T the case...

Foreshadowing a later villain perhaps?

“Well… do you know of a way I can return to my world?”

“I’m not sure… maybe the Steelhammer Guild could know of a way to help you. By the way, may I ask what your name is?”
Well that was some easy info to get! Maybe it makes up for the very poor taste prank!

“I’m Akari, what about you?”

The Zorua seemed surprised by her name at first, before finally replying:

“You may call me Shade.”
Shade is a cool name.

“And what is this Steelhammer Guild?”

“It’s a guild led by Tinkaton, do you want me to lead you there? This forest has some dangerous pokemon, you could get hurt if you go alone.”
So Shade is offering to help. Good! Time to pay off that tab for scaring Akari half to death!

Something about Shade seemed suspicious, yet there was also another feeling she felt when looking at him. A feeling of familiarity and vague recollection. It felt almost as if they had somehow met before, but how was that possible? She had never met a talking Zorua before, right? Eventually, she ignored the feeling of suspicion and replied:

“Sure, I’ll follow you.”
That's nifty! Did Shade used to be a human too then? :eyes:

Summary
So we get introduced to our main character and presumed party member, Shade. They are in an autumnal forest and they have a destination in mind for where to seek help for Akari to return to the human world. A fine start to a journey hopefully with more to soon be revealed! This seems to be flowing reasonably well so far. I'd be curious to see where this autumnal path leads.
 

CuteBunnyGirl

Volo Enthusiast
Location
Somewhere
Pronouns
She/Her
Partners
  1. giratina-origin
Review:
Chapter 1 - An Unfamiliar World

A new fic? Ooo and its a super short chapter I see!

Lets jump in for a surprise review!

I'll do my usual here. I don't think there should be any issues?


Wow sounds like this starts off with an act of betrayal that ends in death of the one betrayed?! :wowzard:


Solid opening chapter title.


Akari. Nice name. And yes, something is most certainly off. You are in mystery land now!


Autumnal is an actual word?! You learn something new every day! :wowzard:

That said, what a nifty word to describe it. My mind is flooded with trees and vibrant leaves. What a cool way to use minimal words to pull out such vividness! :veelove:

It might be nice if there was some kind of nod to Akari finding the place beautiful though. Also, what time of day is it? I'm imagining it being in the afternoon with golden rays of light breaking through the thin barrier of leaves after some had fallen. The floor littered with vibrant leaves in combination with the ones on the trees.

Hate to break it to you but...
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Waking up in a strange vibrantly beautiful AUTUMNAL forest doesn't sound like such a bad dream to me!


Yep, definitely a wizard.

From here I feel like there are a few possible reactions from her:
1. white paws? OH how cute! :mewlulz:
2. White... paws? What the...
3. I'm not dreaming and I have white paws. Well, sanity was good while it lasted at least.


Not a bad choice as far as these things go!


What an experience that would be. At least she is somewhere beautiful.


Someone is there it seems!


THAT would be a BIT scary! :wowzard:


I'm surprised she doesn't just full-on faint here. Being SURPRISED by a Garchomp right behind her would be beyond terrifying!


Yeah, she can't outrun it on those comparatively short stubby legs...

She most certainly can't fight it either and probably doesn't even really know how in her body yet!

Yelling help though? I guess that's probably the best she could do. Either that or beg the Garchomp not to devour her whole.


I'm already feeling happier for her.

Sounds like an illusion!


Nice that she can figure these kinds of things out!


Is it bad that I want to full-on punch that Zorua in the face?


Tries to attack? I'm not sure I would go that far, but she was scared so badly that its easy to assume she is not thinking very clearly right now.


Just trying to prank? Scaring someone half to death is NOT funny! :screm:


She is just going to jump right into looking for a way out? It's impressive how fast she can shift gears here!


Usually? Now I'm wondering about the times that ISN'T the case...

Foreshadowing a later villain perhaps?


Well that was some easy info to get! Maybe it makes up for the very poor taste prank!


Shade is a cool name.


So Shade is offering to help. Good! Time to pay off that tab for scaring Akari half to death!


That's nifty! Did Shade used to be a human too then? :eyes:

Summary
So we get introduced to our main character and presumed party member, Shade. They are in an autumnal forest and they have a destination in mind for where to seek help for Akari to return to the human world. A fine start to a journey hopefully with more to soon be revealed! This seems to be flowing reasonably well so far. I'd be curious to see where this autumnal path leads.
Thanks for the review, I'm glad to see you like my content! While I don't want to spoil too much, it's still nice to see your speculation towards what will happen! Also, since I didn't remember to say this before, most of the content warnings will apply closer to the ending of the story rather than at the start. And indeed, to keep it mostly spoiler-free, I'll just say Shade will be a major character in the story. Also it's pretty cool you learned a new word through my writing!
 
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