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Chapter 14 and 15 complete!
It's Mark isnt it? Thats the only reason Mint doesn't just deck the big bad until he creis uncle.
Eww this adds a squick twist to "and we shall rule together" doesn't it.
Mind bleach mind bleach!
So random thought, due to his fixation with doduos shedding I suspect Mark might be a little allergic to the turkeys feathers. If thats the case would doduo sitting on Mark solve the big bad problem?
Wait where is doduo because i remember it running ahead...
Wait, I thought Mint already knew it was Mark? Oh well, (dully) surprise?
Ah but will the subscription cancel out when Mr. Dark's credit card inevitibly expires, therefore nullifying the auto update?
I'm sorry... Can you tell i'm one of those that lives to crash big bad monologues? I'd say its a bad trait but it keeps me easily amused.
Wonder why Axel didnt see any of this go down and warn Mint though?
Thank goodness Mint wasn't taken, she is fit enough to be a threat just by socking people... Mark's (to put it nicely) a bit of a wuss, so even if the big bad does win, a brisk walking speed will keep the masses safe.
Until they get suckered into duels.
Like he shared with Seth and Trish, who he ditched and left wildly underpowere for incoming threats?. Does it come with a goth makeover, and can you say no to it?
Because dresscode like that is a crime...
Whats the fiscal conversion rate to power and glory?
I'm sorry, I cant help myself...
... i'd actually argue that him taking over gentleman and with Mint's naturally firey temper that you could nix her dispair and waffling. It feels wildly out of character for her. What temptation is there? Living by a shell of a man who wears her loved ones face? The insult seems likenitnwould be prod enough (living in perpetual hostage situation) to infuriate her.
Considering murder of multiple peoples identities is an acceptible starting point for Mr. Dark I'd say his plans are, as a whole, probably going to be bad.
If she hits him again it'd definitly be by her hands... just saying....
How is he able to dictate the rules of this duel as a final boss? So Clair's efforts are a dues ex mechanica, that works?
Huh interesting to see MothZapper being used against the protags. I'm surprised he didnt god-mode a different deck in but considering she's been with Mark for so long she should know its ins and outs...
Right...
Hopefully?
Not-Mark pulled a Flowey I see, screwing with time. And not-Mark is screwing with her head. Wonder how his powers work through a concussion? Mint could test that. Marks a very understanding
Gentleman...
If you keep them talking sometimes you get acess to a weakness ala smaug and the snail shell convo...
I fixed a missed paragraph break for you here...
Eventually somones going to need a snack break or bathroom break. And if he only remembers he's going to get bored really fast... just saying...
Burn the book. He cant reset if theres no book to reset from.
Well we got the meta rules of the game now. Fun times for Mints sanity up a head
As she takes on Cy' and tries to stall for team ghost'.
Wait until somone tells this lunitic about the mobile version of the trading card game... his mind will be blown.
I wonder how much bad data he got through that trick. Religious fanatics aren't usually discerning in their researxh. Cy' coukd have scalds of bad data (or even worthless fanish stuff roiling around upstairs due to this badly thought out system.
I must of missed doduo's proud return, but hey, he's here to ruin a few hands by taking nips or being chaotoc. Might buy Mint some time too.
But really, Cy' used godmode to bring forth the ultimate Turkey mon? Why not the Meowth line, or Persians! We could have a world with giant fluffy albino puma-kitties and he denied it to us! The monster!
I could make so many comments about stupidity and mobs. I wont. but know i'm thinking them.....
I think Cyrus and Cypress could form a "only i am perfect fanclub"... except in thier first mweting theyd get distracted in route to the meeting by a mirror.
Way he's going, the only person Cypress would be happy dueling is himself.
snorts. Mint pushing with that exact word choic us flashing me back to a five year old. I'm surprised Cy rolled with it to be honest.
I can see the writing on the wall. The fact that its gunna be Timmy that undoes this is hilarious...
Well thats one way to be woken up. And funnily enough its a neat reverse to how she joined the party. Nice tie in to the tales begining.
... of course he uses his last life to body hop to doduo... if only pokeballs were a thing... this would be over in seconds.
Theure going to have to card duel this bird aren't they... how is this going to work...
Do'Cy'duo is quite the headcase... and it also explains why it glued itaelf to Mark. Will this be a twin duel where Mark and Mint have to takw him down and winat once or...
Or Mint could dice and win. That works. Interesting that his wandering with Mark was a bit of a redemption arch.
With creepy stalker vibes...
But still a subdued redemption arch...
Doduo is such a creeper, ShiniGira would probably feel vindicated. Marks a sap. He's going to fall for these puppy eyes and sad violen noises... please be smarter then him Mint... please...
She's falling for it too... unnnng... nooo...
And Axel, the betrayal knows no bounds.
So.theyre going to get married after saving the world. Its a fun upbeat cap to an insane tale.
Overall it was a fun irrelevent read. Thanks for shaing and hopefully my feedback helped.
Post edit commentary:
Unsealing redo
You... did not... just alter a few terms and... (barks a laugh) so they open just like a super market door... and are decked out in a more gaudy manner than the kocal card collector/duel shop. That is both on the nose and hillarious all at once...
Revisiting the offer scene
Did anyone else weigh in on that or am i just that persuasive? Nice use of the antigrav tech to defang the direct skultion btw. Amd the chapter reads much easier w/o mints... ah... waffling. Looks nice.
(I've pegged both of these into the original fics review trail)
It's Mark isnt it? Thats the only reason Mint doesn't just deck the big bad until he creis uncle.
Eww this adds a squick twist to "and we shall rule together" doesn't it.
Mind bleach mind bleach!
So random thought, due to his fixation with doduos shedding I suspect Mark might be a little allergic to the turkeys feathers. If thats the case would doduo sitting on Mark solve the big bad problem?
Wait where is doduo because i remember it running ahead...
Wait, I thought Mint already knew it was Mark? Oh well, (dully) surprise?
Ah but will the subscription cancel out when Mr. Dark's credit card inevitibly expires, therefore nullifying the auto update?
I'm sorry... Can you tell i'm one of those that lives to crash big bad monologues? I'd say its a bad trait but it keeps me easily amused.
Wonder why Axel didnt see any of this go down and warn Mint though?
Thank goodness Mint wasn't taken, she is fit enough to be a threat just by socking people... Mark's (to put it nicely) a bit of a wuss, so even if the big bad does win, a brisk walking speed will keep the masses safe.
Until they get suckered into duels.
share in some of my power and glory.
Like he shared with Seth and Trish, who he ditched and left wildly underpowere for incoming threats?. Does it come with a goth makeover, and can you say no to it?
Because dresscode like that is a crime...
Whats the fiscal conversion rate to power and glory?
I'm sorry, I cant help myself...
"He already has my gentleman! If I can't get him back, Cypress is all that remains! If I give myself to him, I can have everything I could ever want! Maybe I could even live forever at his side? Even if i can beat him and my gentleman returns to me, we will both eventually age and die! Look at how smart he is to have arranged all this! He called me beautiful and strong. He acknowledges me! He hasn't shown me any hostility and will let me rule with him! What lies beyond the nexus? What future will he weave? It would be so easy if I accept. Isn’t my sense of power just misguided? He can beat this deck I have even though it should lose to nothing! If I yield to him, he could handle and direct everything. He would take charge and I would only need to serve him. Life as a pet of a man that smart and powerful could be a paradise..."
... i'd actually argue that him taking over gentleman and with Mint's naturally firey temper that you could nix her dispair and waffling. It feels wildly out of character for her. What temptation is there? Living by a shell of a man who wears her loved ones face? The insult seems likenitnwould be prod enough (living in perpetual hostage situation) to infuriate her.
What if his plans are bad?
Considering murder of multiple peoples identities is an acceptible starting point for Mr. Dark I'd say his plans are, as a whole, probably going to be bad.
See above....What if everything suffers from it?
If she hits him again it'd definitly be by her hands... just saying....
How is he able to dictate the rules of this duel as a final boss? So Clair's efforts are a dues ex mechanica, that works?
Huh interesting to see MothZapper being used against the protags. I'm surprised he didnt god-mode a different deck in but considering she's been with Mark for so long she should know its ins and outs...
Right...
Hopefully?
Not-Mark pulled a Flowey I see, screwing with time. And not-Mark is screwing with her head. Wonder how his powers work through a concussion? Mint could test that. Marks a very understanding
Gentleman...
If you keep them talking sometimes you get acess to a weakness ala smaug and the snail shell convo...
Everything he said made me want to vomit, but I realized that more information was unlikely to make things worse so I listened while he continued.
"One of the things I learned from the Progenitor during my time as a researcher was of the existence of a seemingly simple book that the Progenitor references to render our entire world at the time of the last entry! -
I fixed a missed paragraph break for you here...
Eventually somones going to need a snack break or bathroom break. And if he only remembers he's going to get bored really fast... just saying...
Burn the book. He cant reset if theres no book to reset from.
Well we got the meta rules of the game now. Fun times for Mints sanity up a head
As she takes on Cy' and tries to stall for team ghost'.
Wait until somone tells this lunitic about the mobile version of the trading card game... his mind will be blown.
I wonder how much bad data he got through that trick. Religious fanatics aren't usually discerning in their researxh. Cy' coukd have scalds of bad data (or even worthless fanish stuff roiling around upstairs due to this badly thought out system.
I must of missed doduo's proud return, but hey, he's here to ruin a few hands by taking nips or being chaotoc. Might buy Mint some time too.
But really, Cy' used godmode to bring forth the ultimate Turkey mon? Why not the Meowth line, or Persians! We could have a world with giant fluffy albino puma-kitties and he denied it to us! The monster!
I could make so many comments about stupidity and mobs. I wont. but know i'm thinking them.....
I think Cyrus and Cypress could form a "only i am perfect fanclub"... except in thier first mweting theyd get distracted in route to the meeting by a mirror.
Way he's going, the only person Cypress would be happy dueling is himself.
snorts. Mint pushing with that exact word choic us flashing me back to a five year old. I'm surprised Cy rolled with it to be honest.
I can see the writing on the wall. The fact that its gunna be Timmy that undoes this is hilarious...
Well thats one way to be woken up. And funnily enough its a neat reverse to how she joined the party. Nice tie in to the tales begining.
... of course he uses his last life to body hop to doduo... if only pokeballs were a thing... this would be over in seconds.
Theure going to have to card duel this bird aren't they... how is this going to work...
Do'Cy'duo is quite the headcase... and it also explains why it glued itaelf to Mark. Will this be a twin duel where Mark and Mint have to takw him down and winat once or...
Or Mint could dice and win. That works. Interesting that his wandering with Mark was a bit of a redemption arch.
With creepy stalker vibes...
But still a subdued redemption arch...
Doduo is such a creeper, ShiniGira would probably feel vindicated. Marks a sap. He's going to fall for these puppy eyes and sad violen noises... please be smarter then him Mint... please...
She's falling for it too... unnnng... nooo...
And Axel, the betrayal knows no bounds.
So.theyre going to get married after saving the world. Its a fun upbeat cap to an insane tale.
Overall it was a fun irrelevent read. Thanks for shaing and hopefully my feedback helped.
Post edit commentary:
Unsealing redo
You... did not... just alter a few terms and... (barks a laugh) so they open just like a super market door... and are decked out in a more gaudy manner than the kocal card collector/duel shop. That is both on the nose and hillarious all at once...
Revisiting the offer scene
Did anyone else weigh in on that or am i just that persuasive? Nice use of the antigrav tech to defang the direct skultion btw. Amd the chapter reads much easier w/o mints... ah... waffling. Looks nice.
(I've pegged both of these into the original fics review trail)
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