Pokémon The kalosian journeys

[kingvoid]

hi i am a young teen who likes pokemon here is my shonen take on pokemon journeys
the main core stuff of the story :
1.Ash is not ten he is eighteen here
2.There is one year for every gen like in kanto he was 10 and in kalos he was 16 showing his growth in alola he was 17 and now he is 18
3.We will meet a king from XYZ
4.Villains will be there but not like your usual giovanni
5.Moves that don't exist will be here
6.Power scaling here is known as bond power or pokespirit
7.Domain expansion
8.Ash is more mature here and can take hints of intimacy
Characters
1.Ash
2.Serena
3.Clemont
4.Goh
5.Bonnie
6.Prof cerise (idc about yall saying "the spelling is wrong" i will spell it this way)
7.Mew
8.Arceus (jokingly called Arkoos as he will be overshadowed alot)
9.Giovanni
10.Team Rocket
I will uploading this very soon
Post your feedback

 

[kingvoid]

Chapter 1: The Obsidian Resonance
The air in the Cerise Laboratory usually smelled of ozone and sterile data, but today, it felt heavy like the atmosphere before a catastrophic storm.
Ash Ketchum, eighteen and standing a head taller than he did a year ago, wasn't looking at a monitor. He was staring at Goh’s Frogadier. The blue Pokémon was practicing its Aerial Ace, but to Ash’s eyes, the movements were... slow. Simplified.
"The form is good, Goh," Ash said, his voice deeper, carrying the weight of the Alolan throne. "But it’s hollow. There’s no Pokespirit behind the strike."
Goh looked up from his Rotom Phone, his eyes bloodshot from a fourteen-hour "Data Grind." "What are you talking about, Ash? The math is perfect. His velocity is top-tier for his level."
Ash didn't blink. He felt a phantom itch in his chest—a literal tugging on his soul that stretched across the ocean, all the way to the Kalosian woods. The Bond Phenomenon wasn't just a move anymore; it was a heartbeat he shared with a King.
"He's hitting the target," Ash whispered, his eyes beginning to shimmer with a faint, obsidian blue light. "But he’s not deleting it."
Across the room, Professor Cerise froze. On his massive wall-sized monitor, a needle labeled [pokespirit] suddenly spiked from a calm 40 bHz to a screaming 850. The cooling fans in the supercomputer began to wail in agony.
"Ash?" Cerise's voice trembled, his 'Data Addiction' kicking in as he scrambled to record the anomaly. "What are you doing? Your molecular density is... it's shifting! GIVE IT TO ME! Give me the readout on that pulse!"
Ash ignored the Professor. He turned toward the window, looking toward the horizon where the Kalos region lay.
"Goh, pack your bags. " Ash shadow-boxed a single, lightning-fast jab into the empty air. The friction caused a miniature sonic boom that shattered a nearby beaker. "We’re going back to the roots. It’s time I showed you what a 100% Sync actually looks like."
In the shadows of the lab, Cerise’s eyes widened. He didn't see a student anymore. He saw a glitch in the universe that he needed to archive.
The Kalosian Journey had officially begun.

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[kingvoid]

Chapter 2: Freeing Kalos
Ash and Goh finally reach lumiose airport where they are greeted by Clemont and Bonnie
Bonnie: "Ash! Clemont says i'll get my first pokemon today!"
Ash: "Woah Bonnie really which one?"
Bonnie: "Ash you know which one its obviously dedenne"
Ash "Oh yea where is it anyways?"
Bonnie "Hmph its sleeping."
Clemont "Bonnie come on let's go"
Ash and the gang go to the Lumiose woods , where Greninja spends his time defending Kalos from team Flare's corrupted vines
Ash suddenly feels a familiar feeling like the Kalos league again
Cerise was just screaming "Ash, this isn't possible your bond hertz is rising above the normal level! GIVE IT TO ME"
Ash ignores Cerise's weird behavior and whispers to Goh "Please act like your range is cutting out he is annoying me"
Goh cuts Cerise video call acting like his range was cutting out
Ash feels the feeling getting stronger he can feel Greninja
Out of nowhere a big vine radiating a energy that other Corrupted vines radiated but this one was one of the biggest he sensed in the forest
This was the Mother Vine this vine is the root of all Corrupted Vines if Ash defeated it the terror the vines caused would end
Goh "Ash i got this Cinderace will beat it to a pulp."
Ash "Goh you already don't need to i can defeat"
Goh "*laughing* how are going to defeat that with a pikachu *laughing harder*"
Ash "Oh i won't be using pikachu ... Greninja lets go"
Suddenly Greninja appears from the trees ready to fight
Greninja "Nin-ja!"
Goh "*Laughing even harder* you're gonna beat a grass type with a water type *still laughing*"
Clemont "Don't underestimate Ash even if he has the type disadvantage he can still turn the tides"
Ash "Come on Greninja use Ice Beam!"
Greninja uses a ice beam dealing a little damage not that much but enough to show he has a weakness
Goh brings out Cinderace
Goh "Cinderace use Pyro-Ball!"
A super effective move but the Mother Vine absorbs the kinetic energy from it Goh is shocked and suprised it did nothing!
Ash uses his insane battle IQ to invent a new move
Ash immediately bonds with Greninja and ready to fight
Ash "Greninja use Ice Impact!"
Greninja "Nin-Ja
Goh "Ash that's not even a move!?!?!"
Even if it wasn't a move Ash's sheer B hrtz (bond hertz) was so powerful that he signaled telepathically that "condense a ball of water into your hand and just as you hit the Vine Freeze it into Ice"
Now The Mother Vine was frozen solid with sheer power of Ice Impact
Clemont "Ash you really used your bond with Greninja to improvise a new move! that's Genius!"
Now the finishing blow was required to finish it off!
Ash "Greninja! , use Aerial Ace!"
This shatters the ice and ends The Mother Vine's Corruption
Serena was just practicing for her next performance in the Lumiose woods and heard the clash
Serena "Pangoro Follow me!"
Serena rushes to the area where she heard the Impact
She knew greninja was here and knew that she would hear some clashes but she didn't expect one this powerful!
She reached and saw a crater with smoke coming out the dust clears out and she sees ash
Ash "Serena! Long time no see!"
Serena "I always missed you Ash so great to see you again and greninja such a big clash didn't except that"
Ash "Missed you too!:
Greninja "Ninja!"
They head to a hotel to rest.
The End of this chapter

 

[Tango]

Hello again! With you being new and having such wonderfully short chapters, I decided to pop in for some reviews of your fic! I hope you enjoy!

hi i am a young teen who likes pokemon here is my shonen take on pokemon journeys

Oh, I thought you said you are a pre-teen in your intro post? But no worries!

I hid most of my comments behind a spoiler tag so it doesn't take up too much space in your fic. Just click it to expand!

Spoiler: Line by line

the main core stuff of the story :
1.Ash is not ten he is eighteen here

Ash being forever a kid is something that always bugged me. Good choice.

2.There is one year for every gen like in kanto he was 10 and in kalos he was 16 showing his growth in alola he was 17 and now he is 18

Simple and works well. Nice!

3.We will meet a king from XYZ

Seems like a little spoiler but it can also build anticipation, so it still works!

4.Villains will be there but not like your usual giovanni

Hmm! Sounds neat!

5.Moves that don't exist will be here

Sounds cool.

6.Power scaling here is known as bond power or pokespirit

Sometimes it's nice just having the rules of a fic laid out. Makes it easy to understand!

7.Domain expansion

Could this be an inspiration from a certain popular anime??

8.Ash is more mature here and can take hints of intimacy
Characters

Yes PLEASE!! I always hated how the anime never allowed Ash to be in any kind of relationship. They really dropped the ball on that.

1.Ash
2.Serena
3.Clemont
4.Goh
5.Bonnie
6.Prof cerise (idc about yall saying "the spelling is wrong" i will spell it this way)
7.Mew
8.Arceus (jokingly called Arkoos as he will be overshadowed alot)
9.Giovanni
10.Team Rocket

Nice cast of characters here! Sounds promising.

I will uploading this very soon

Always good to see a fellow author excited to post stuff!

Post your feedback

Smart of you to include this line. It helped me confirm that feedback was something you wanted!

But I'm not done. Let's take a look at your chapters!

Chapter 1: The Obsidian Resonance

Oh wow. Now that's a cool name for a chapter! Cool points awarded here for you.

The air in the Cerise Laboratory usually smelled of ozone and sterile data, but today, it felt heavy like the atmosphere before a catastrophic storm.

Ooo! What a tense way to start!

And by the way, I'm impressed how little spelling and grammar errors I'm seeing here and you seem to have a knack for some cool descriptions!

Ash Ketchum, eighteen and standing a head taller than he did a year ago, wasn't looking at a monitor. He was staring at Goh’s Frogadier. The blue Pokémon was practicing its Aerial Ace, but to Ash’s eyes, the movements were... slow. Simplified.

Neat way of communicating Ash's experience in the way that he observes!

"The form is good, Goh," Ash said, his voice deeper, carrying the weight of the Alolan throne. "But it’s hollow. There’s no Pokespirit behind the strike."
Goh looked up from his Rotom Phone, his eyes bloodshot from a fourteen-hour "Data Grind." "What are you talking about, Ash? The math is perfect. His velocity is top-tier for his level."
Ash didn't blink. He felt a phantom itch in his chest—a literal tugging on his soul that stretched across the ocean, all the way to the Kalosian woods. The Bond Phenomenon wasn't just a move anymore; it was a heartbeat he shared with a King.

Seems like you are setting up some interesting plot threads!

"He's hitting the target," Ash whispered, his eyes beginning to shimmer with a faint, obsidian blue light. "But he’s not deleting it."
Across the room, Professor Cerise froze. On his massive wall-sized monitor, a needle labeled [pokespirit] suddenly spiked from a calm 40 bHz to a screaming 850. The cooling fans in the supercomputer began to wail in agony.
"Ash?" Cerise's voice trembled, his 'Data Addiction' kicking in as he scrambled to record the anomaly. "What are you doing? Your molecular density is... it's shifting! GIVE IT TO ME! Give me the readout on that pulse!"

Ooo that sounds significant!

Ash ignored the Professor. He turned toward the window, looking toward the horizon where the Kalos region lay.
"Goh, pack your bags. " Ash shadow-boxed a single, lightning-fast jab into the empty air.

I'm really curious if this is your first fic. Your prose is unexpectedly nice!

Quite a bit of mood and intrigue you set up here!

The friction caused a miniature sonic boom that shattered a nearby beaker. "We’re going back to the roots. It’s time I showed you what a 100% Sync actually looks like."
In the shadows of the lab, Cerise’s eyes widened. He didn't see a student anymore. He saw a glitch in the universe that he needed to archive.
The Kalosian Journey had officially begun.

Ok ok!! Yeah! Nice way to start a fic!

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The small chapters make it so easy for people to pop in to give you reviews. Any ideas on how long you plan to make your fic?

I've got a fic at the bottom of my post here with a link too if your are curious.

Have a great day! 😉