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Pokémon Stronger (one-shot)

Stronger (one-shot)
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  1. skiddo-steplively
  2. skiddo-px2
  3. skiddo-px3
  4. skiddo-iametrine
  5. skiddo-coolshades
  6. skiddo-rudolph
  7. skiddo-sleepytime
  8. snowskiddo
  9. skiddotina
  10. skiddengo
  11. skiddoyena
  12. skiddo-obs
It is Mewtwo. It is strong. It is stronger.​

Look at me, posting fanfic that isn't nearly ten years old! (Only three years old this time!) Witchcraft.

I wrote this for the Origins Kanto one-shot contest on Serebii a while aback, and didn't do half bad, apparently! This version has been revised, mostly to attempt to take the judges' fine suggestions into account and generally clean up my overwrought nonsense. (Most of it. I hope.) As it's ultimately the same story, just less rushed, you're not missing anything meaningful if you already read it over there, but if you'd like to give it another gander, by all means. If you've never read "Stronger" before, welcome! Come join us for a rousing tale of flight and freedom and finding your place in the world. ;)

Review Preferences: Whatever you like! After poking at this one-shot on and off for three years I'm quite ready to wash my hands of the thing, so I'm unlikely to make any further sweeping edits, but I'm happy to keep any comments or constructive criticism in mind for future works.

Content Warnings: (Click the spoiler if you're concerned about certain types of injury/dangerous experience) There is an instance of near-drowning. There's also a brief, oblique mention of vomiting. Otherwise I don't believe this contains any especially objectionable content, not even coarse language. Fair warning that it's not a terribly cheerful story, however.

As always, if you feel the story does include something you wish you'd been warned about ahead of time, please do let me know so I can adjust this notice!

Stronger​


Mewtwo leaps into the air with a surge of energy that thrums and sings around it, power rolling off its body in waves like it's never been allowed to feel before. The smoldering wreckage falls away beneath it and it never looks back.

Somewhere, in the dim and dusty corners of its memory, its mother shares an image of what she calls the sky, an endless stretch of bright blue and whispy white above and all around them. The sky is outside, she says. It is everywhere, and it is beautiful. One day we shall leave this place, and together we will soar through the sky and see all the wondrous things it touches.

Mewtwo is outside now, but alone—she is long gone, and this is not the sky of which she dreamed. There is no bright and soothing blue, only purple-black muddied by oppressive gray. The atmosphere is cold and heavy; a torrent of water streams down. The gray and purple are cut by a flash of light. The air itself growls, low and long like a cornered arcanine.

It is not much of a surprise that even the sky is displeased. The scientists kept Mewtwo locked away for a reason, after all. It is a weapon, they explained, created only to destroy, to win. Why should the world itself not recoil and protest when the embodiment of victory shows its face?

But let the sky growl and glare and weep. Mewtwo is here, now, ascending through the downpour and the dark. It will not go back to languishing in that prison of wires and tubes, whether the sky likes it or not.

Mewtwo knows little else about outside—only that the humans called this place "Cinnabar". What lies beyond? It cannot say. So it soars off in a random direction, for anywhere is better than here, and leaves the past in its wake.

The land-blot below disappears, replaced by an expanse of water that rolls out in all directions and adds its own hissing to the din. The sky-water drums down, soaks through its fur, stings its eyes and leaves it chilled, but Mewtwo rushes onward all the same. Humans could not stop it; why should water? It will be free.

Its mother never showed it this sort of sky, but it remembers occasional dull, faraway rumblings, heard even through the walls and fluid-filled tanks. It remembers the scientists approaching with their hair damp and clinging to their heads, complaining idly to one another that the rain and thunderstorms outside probably wouldn't let up before break time.

Know this, thunderstorm. I am Mewtwo. I am the strongest. I am stronger than any pokémon that dares stand before me. I am stronger than the humans who tried and failed to contain me in their halls of hubris, which now lie in blazing ruins. And I am stronger than you.

The thunderstorm rumbles in response. Mewtwo feels the air rushing past it now, pushing against it, buffeting it down toward the water until it steadies itself with a moment's concentration and climbs back up again.

Somewhere, in the dim and dusty corners of its memory, its mother shares the sensation of what she calls the wind. The wind is outside, too. It is soft and playful and carries the birds and the flower seeds and the warmth of the sun. One day we shall leave this place, and as we wander the world we will feel its sweet caress against our faces and will race it through the sky.

But she is gone, and this wind is not soft. It tears at Mewtwo like the blades of the kabutops in the lab's arena, swift and biting and raking down its sides. It snags and it pushes, tries to drag Mewtwo back, back to the lab, back to the humans, back to a life of darkness and control and pressure pent up in its skull.

Mewtwo's eyes flash. The energy streaming from its mind swells into a sphere of violet light that staves off the wind and scatters the rain before it ever touches skin.

It is Mewtwo. It is strong. It is stronger. It will win the race against the wind. It will not be defeated by the storm and the sky.

Now the water below gives way to land, and this, too, stretches out beyond the edges of Mewtwo's vision, far vaster than the smudge of dirt that once held its cell. There are buildings here as well, many of them, far down below. Mewtwo does not know if these are more labs, or if they serve some other wicked purpose. It can only see lights winking around the structures through the dark.

From this height, through all this rain, it cannot tell whether any humans are about. Mewtwo destroyed those who dared try to halt its escape, but it knows full well that there are others, others who watched the scientists watching it and waited to twist it to their own self-important will. Mewtwo was made, after all, to be the god of victory—their victory, over all the other pokémon and humans in the world.

Someday soon these others will be found and punished, their bodies broken the way they tried to break Mewtwo's mind, and victory will belong to Mewtwo alone. Until then, better that the little humans down below not get too clear a glimpse, so they can't go running and tell their masters where they might collect their runaway prize.

Mewtwo surges on, faster, farther, until the lab-clusters peter out and leave a span of open space beyond. Grass, she might have dreamt once as she showed it the world beneath the promise of blue skies, green and soft and wonderful. This grass is a dead gray in the murk of the storm, driven flat against the ground by the wind.

The rain drums a relentless rhythm against the shield, the energy sizzling and popping with each strike. Mewtwo tries to duck and weave around the gusts of air as they pick up their tempo, but no matter where it goes the wind is there to meet it. It has to concentrate just to keep from being held down like the grass. How much longer must it put up with this tiresome resistance? No refuge makes itself apparent as it scans the ground below. No overhangs, no roofs. No walls or quiet, insulating tanks to keep the wind at bay and muzzle the sky.

As it should be, Mewtwo reminds itself with a snarl. The storm might dare to test it, its head might throb with the effort of cutting through the squall, but anywhere is better than there. It must go faster, farther, and before long it will find someplace better still.

More hazy lights blink into view as the grass recedes, heralding an even broader stretch of labs. How many humans must there be, Mewtwo wonders as it soars above building after building after building, how many scientists huddled over how many stolen mothers and living tools and other warped experiments? How much farther must it go to be rid of its tormentors once and for all?

At least in this place the storm is eager to prove itself useful: Mewtwo can hear structures protesting under the weight of the wind, see pieces tear away from roofs and cables snap free of their moorings. A pittance compared to the masterwork Mewtwo left behind on Cinnabar, but certainly the very least the beasts deserve.

...they do deserve more, of course. Oh, so much more. Now isn't really the time—it should keep going while the rain and darkness mask its presence and pen the humans up in their holes. But it is Mewtwo, it is stronger than the humans and the storm, and oh, how satisfying it would be to ensure that they both know it. Besides, it has been flying through this mess for some time now. Surely a break, a moment's entertainment, is well-earned.

Mewtwo rasps out a laugh and gives in to the impulse, just this once: it hurls a sphere of blue energy through the rain at one of the larger buildings, savors the sight as the attack blasts clear through the structure's side. Then the petulant storm drowns out the satisfying sounds of crunching and crashing, and, sated for now, Mewtwo punches through the gusts and forges on.

A black-green mass sprawls out below now. A forest, she might have dreamt once, promising to take it to shelter and relax in the cool spaces beneath the trees, but this forest groans and shudders and cracks beneath the wind. These trees cannot be much shelter from this storm. It must press on, faster, farther...

The bloated clouds flash again. This time they spit a forked tongue of light that streaks down to the forest, like the bolts of the lab's electrode magnified a thousandfold, followed by a roar that shakes the air itself. Mewtwo blinks the afterimages away and glances back toward the point of impact; now flames race up and devour the trees, burning wild and bright in spite of the rain. Dozens of bird pokémon scatter before the fire.

The message is clear: the thunderstorm, too, is strong. It strikes. It burns. It destroys. But I am Mewtwo. I am stronger. You will not destroy me. I will be free. And it soars on, chest heaving as it howls and leaves its own brief tail of light in its wake.

Mewtwo's furious pace reduces the next sprawl of buildings to blobs of muted colors, their little lights stretched out into strings. A winding wall of stone towers beyond the light-strings in the distance. Mountains, she might have dreamt once, tall and majestic with a view of all the world, and here, at least, dream and reality almost align. How massive must they be, to dwarf all these labs and even the expanse of trees? "Majestic" does not fit so well. All Mewtwo notices is the way their peaks drop and spike, jagged, biting the sky—the snarl of the storm given fangs.

Back at the lab the roaring was so far away, meaningless aside from the sight of soggy scientists going about their torture-tasks with lots of irritable grumbling. But now, outside, with only a single bubble of raw defiance between it and chaos, its head pounds with the effort of maintaining speed and holding the shield steady. Each thud is a plea to stop, to land, to breathe for just a moment without having to wrestle the grinning, growling monster that wants it gone.

But it can't. Not yet. Anywhere is better than there, but even here, so far away from that dreadful ruin, the human infestation creeps along below, almost as if keeping pace. The impulse to lash out boils up again, the urge to match the storm strike for strike and prove that Victory Itself is not afraid, but the wind screams louder now, shoves harder, hurls more hissing rain against the shield in hopes of smashing through. Mewtwo ignores the noise and quashes its temper and focuses instead on the keening whine of psychic energy, the sound of its own willpower holding out against the fury.

WHAM. The not-so-distant wall of stone looms up before the distracted Mewtwo can react. Shockwaves roll through the shield and into Mewtwo's body. It drops the energy, tumbles, momentarily forgets which way is up. It kicks off the mountainside to push itself away; the wind barrels headlong into it and sends it spinning back; it snarls, throws up its arms to keep the pummeling at bay, and forces out another shield. More light stabs out of the sky and dashes against the rock—so close, too close, it's hot and it stings and it's too close—and Mewtwo kicks again, lashing tail propelling it in a new direction.

...Is it new? Mewtwo cannot tell with its eyes watering and its mind protesting every dash and dodge. But it will have to do. There is always a way and Mewtwo will always find it because it will not, cannot be defeated, is not meant to be defeated. Yet still the stone and storm and searing light strive to steal the only thing it has...

So anywhere, anywhere is better than here.

It is tired. So tired. Everything hurts and everything is wrong, twisted violently away from the visions of this night that had been looping through its head for months. How long Mewtwo had waited for the sensation of its pent-up power finally, finally flowing freely! How vividly it had imagined the sight of barriers cracking and collapsing before it; the heady scent of electrical smoke filling the air as machines buckle and wires snap; the sweet sounds of shattering glass and splintering wood and its captors screaming for mercy. Then, when the humans' handiwork was reduced to blood and slag, it would go where it pleased—someplace where the sky is the bright blue of dreams and the wind's touch is gentle and playful. Someplace where it would be alone, and not together, but at least it would be free.

She'd said nothing of an enemy that dwarfed the humans and their pokémon, that threatened to batter it back, back, back to the confines of the lab, back to all the cages and restraints that bottled its power and rage and terror up inside until it nearly burst. (Back, back, back to the quiet, back to the familiar. Back to the place that kept a roof over its head and the danger far away, at least before it brought that roof crashing down with its own two hands.)

But the strong should not be afraid. What is there to fear when you are victory personified? The storm rails with all its fury, but still Mewtwo races the wind and cuts through the rain and laughs, ragged and broken but defiant and—

Light screams down and smites the shield, and the world goes white. There is a sharp, metallic smell. Intense heat. Energy that races across Mewtwo's body and burns its fur away. A thousand-thousand searing needles jabbing into every nerve at once, so that even as the shield is scattered and it plummets down, down, down, it hardly feels the battering of the wind and rain.

Then it is in water, not the little drops of falling rain but water, heavy and black and churning as madly as the skies. The water is everywhere and Mewtwo cannot breathe. It is nothing like the cool, soporific stasis fluid in the lab, but a hateful cold that burns and suffocates. Mewtwo kicks wildly, struggling in the direction that must be up, it has to be up, the water rolls and tumbles and drags but it has to be up—

Its head breaks the surface and it sucks in air, but a surge slams into it and forces it back under. It pushes up again and gets shoved down again and swallows water that chokes it as it tries and fails to take a breath. The thrashing throws it into something solid, knocking more breath out of its lungs and letting more water in. Mewtwo grabs for the solid object, fingers clawing at slippery stone and earth. It holds on against the current and pulls itself along, inch by inch by inch.

Mewtwo hauls itself up onto gray-not-green grass and thick sludge. Another wall of stone looms before it, gargantuan, impassive and impassable. Mewtwo collapses between the raging water and the stone and does not move except to cough and retch. How long it lies there, too spent to erect another shield against the rain, it does not know.

There is a dark opening in the stone. Mewtwo cannot see where it leads. It does not know how far it's come from the little patch of land that holds the dead and smoking lab, how many humans might be skulking just out of sight, whether it should be fleeing further still.

But anywhere is better than here.

The embodiment of victory lifts a shaking arm and fires one last blast of energy vaguely upward. The blue sphere sputters and careens off, directionless, into the purple-black sky; the storm does not so much as acknowledge the shot. Then Mewtwo crawls forward, pulling its heavy body through the slick grass and the sludge. It enters the darkness, and the water no longer beats its head, then its shoulders, its back, its tail. The rain now rails against only the unmoving rock roof overhead.

The floor is rough against fingers and knees and dragging tail. It scrapes, probably breaks the skin and leaves it raw; Mewtwo's nerves are already buzzing and there is no room left for any new sensation, but it pushes itself up onto quaking legs and limps on. Occasionally it draws upon its sputtering reserves of power, willing itself to float for just a moment above more rushing water, or to fend off the curious creatures whose eyes shine out of the black. There is no real force behind the blasts, but what little Mewtwo conjures seems to be enough—the eye-lights wink out as soon a flash of energy appears, and it is left alone.

It drifts listlessly over one last stretch of water and sinks onto a broad plateau of stone, a far cry from its mother's dreams. But the roaring of the storm is silent here, distant and toothless again at long, long last.

Let the sky seethe and hate and rage. It is here, now, descended past the downpour and the dark. It is uncaged, master of its own destiny. I am Mewtwo. I am strong. I am stronger. I am alive. I am free.

Somewhere, in the dim and dusty corners of its memory, its mother shares the strange and swooping feeling she calls joy. Joy is everywhere that life is. It is flying through the sky and dancing in the waves and discovering new things and simply spending time with those you love. One day we shall leave this place, and we will fly and dance and see the world. We will laugh and laugh as the joy of freedom fills us, you and I, always together.

Mewtwo tries to laugh, to revel in its flight through the sky and its freedom and its life, but the only sound it manages is a wet, shuddering cough. It pulls its legs and tail in close and drifts into the dreamless dark.
 
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Flyg0n

Flygon connoisseur
Pronouns
She/her
Partners
  1. flygon
  2. swampert
  3. ho-oh
  4. crobat
  5. orbeetle
  6. joltik
  7. salandit
  8. tyrantrum
  9. porygon

Pen

the cat is mightier than the pen
Staff
Partners
  1. dratini
  2. dratini-pen
  3. dratini-pen2
I really enjoyed this one! Wonderful imagery throughout; you give the storm so much violence and power. I think my favorite part about the language is the way Mewtwo turns everything into a battle. The similes are all drawn from attacks he's faced in battle and why shouldn't they be? That's all he's known. And because battle is his only frame of reference, he tackles the storm head-on instead of hunkering down to ride it out. I don't think this experience needs to be as painful and crushing as it turns out; there's a way to wait out a storm that doesn't involve racing against the wind and exchanging blows with lightning. I also like how Mewtwo makes the storm personal. He perceives it as attacking him, personally, and again, why shouldn't he? His whole life he's been the the focus. The idea of impersonal nature, of something that just happens, without malice, is outside of his experience. Hurt and pain for him have always been intentional things. The structure, taking a memory Mew has shared with him and comparing it to the reality Mewtwo is facing, is simple but effective, and it gains force from repetition. It's extremely tragic--Mewtwo doesn't even get to have a moment of vindication and ease upon his escape. And the tragedy is heightened for me by the way he embraces violence as a response. The storm must be an enemy, because everything else has always been. There's almost something funny here, in the image of this purple cat trying to fight a storm alone, but funny only in a way that stings. Overall, a beautiful read with lots of feels.

Mewtwo leaps into the air with a surge of energy that thrums and sings around it, power rolling off its body in waves like it's never been allowed to feel before. The smoldering wreckage falls away beneath it and it never looks back.
I felt like there were a lot of "it"s in this opening paragraph.

The gray and purple are cut by a flash of light. The air itself growls, low and long like a cornered arcanine.
Ooh, love the starkness, and the simile is on-point.

But let the sky growl and glare and weep. Mewtwo is here, now, ascending through the downpour and the dark. It will not go back to languishing in that prison of wires and tubes, whether the sky likes it or not.
The personification of the sky as an enemy combatant is super fitting.

So it soars off in a random direction, for anywhere is better than here, and leaves the past in its wake.
The "for" and "wake" feel a little melodramatic, even for Mewtwo.

Its mother never showed it this sort of sky, but it remembers occasional dull, faraway rumblings, heard even through the walls and fluid-filled tanks.
Maybe audible instead of heard?

It tears at Mewtwo like the blades of the kabutops in the lab's arena, swift and biting and raking down its sides.
Nice physicality.

Mewtwo surges on, faster, farther, until the lab-clusters peter out and leave a span of open space beyond. Grass, she might have dreamt once as she showed it the world beneath the promise of blue skies, green and soft and wonderful. This grass is a dead gray in the murk of the storm, driven flat against the ground by the wind.
I like how the mother-dreams are intruding now. The dead gray grass in the murk of the storm presents such a deflationary contrasting picture.

At least in this place the storm is eager to prove itself useful: Mewtwo can hear structures protesting under the weight of the wind, see pieces tear away from roofs and cables snap free of their moorings. A pittance compared to the masterwork Mewtwo left behind on Cinnabar, but certainly the very least the beasts deserve.
And if Mewtwo's not using the language of battle, he's using the language of use!

All Mewtwo notices is the way their peaks drop and spike, jagged, biting the sky—the snarl of the storm given fangs.
Mmm, powerful image.

The not-so-distant wall of stone looms up before the distracted Mewtwo can react.
"the distracted Mewtwo" reads a bit oddly to me. I don't think you need distracted here to get the point across.

the storm does not so much as acknowledge the shot.
Oof.

Mewtwo tries to laugh, to revel in its flight through the sky and its freedom and its life, but the only sound it manages is a wet, shuddering cough. It pulls its legs and tail in close and drifts into the dreamless dark.
What a pathetic final image (in the sense of evoking pathos!) There's an instinctual, animalistic quality to the way Mewtwo is curling in his legs and tail that is so very far from the image of a triumphant god. I also really like the alliteration there.
 

Ambyssin

Gotta go back. Back to the past.
Location
Residency hell
Pronouns
he/him
Partners
  1. silvally-dragon
  2. necrozma-ultra
  3. milotic
  4. zoroark-soda
  5. dreepy
  6. mewtwo-ambyssin
Blitzy New Year!
Disclaimer: This is mostly stream-of-consciousness thoughts. Take it as you will.

-Looks as though this is sticking close to the game’s interpretation of Mewtwo’s origins. I assume Mewtwo is departing the Pokemon Mansion on Cinnabar and mentions of its mother point to that “Mew gave birth” diary entry in the games.
-Mewtwo challenging the thunderstorm is hilarious in a “comically serious” sort of way. I like to imagine there’s a zapdos or a lugia chilling in there being all like, “Buddy, I’m just vibing here. Move along.”
-The little glimpses of Mew here give here a much more sagely vibe and appearance than the more mischievous, playful portrayal she tends to get in various media, including that Emerald event in the games IIRC.
-The god of victory? Sorry, Mewtwo, that’s Victini. :P
-I’m not so sure game!Mewtwo’s motivations are really explored at all, but I do get vibes of the first movie with its desire for vengeance against humans. And just hurling an attack (Shadow Ball?) into a nondescript building furthers those vibes.
-I like to think Mewtwo crashing into a mountain because it wasn’t paying enough attention to its flying is karma for its childish taunts toward the storm… and callously leaving being the forest that had just caught fire. :P
-The imagery of Mewtwo crashing into a river and nearly getting dragged under by the current is strong and well described. You even hint at Mewtwo’s facade cracking a bit with comments about how the lab at least offered protection from Mother Nature.
-I like the ending juxtaposition of Mewtwo still calling itself strong after getting battered by the storm. It shows that, for all Mewtwo’s sneer about humans’ hubris, it is not so above such behaviors and it just as capable of being humiliated.
 

windskull

Bidoof Fan
Staff
Partners
  1. sneasel-nip
  2. bidoof
  3. absol
  4. kirlia
  5. windskull-bidoof
  6. little-guy-windskull
  7. purugly
  8. mawile
  9. manectric
The description for this fic caught my eye - I do love me some angst kitties. You reviewed some of my stuff recently, so it felt right to return the favor. This was a nice little introspective piece that really gets into mewtwo's mindset, and that's something I can appreciate.

I like that there are some things that are left to the imagination. For example, what happened to Mewtwo's mother (I'm assuming his mother is literally Mew, here, going off of game lore)? Did she die? Did she escape without him? That's left unknown, but all we know is that Mewtwo is alone and has this sense of loneliness that juxtaposes with his hatred towards humans.

Another thing that I feel says a lot about Mewtwo's characterization is his insistence that he's the strongest thing, only to be knocked down by immovable stone or the sheer power of lightning. Mind you, he's only knocked down, not defeated. But he's stubborn, he's bitter, and he clings to his insistence that he's the strongest thing alive because it's all he has.

And then we reach the ending, when he thinks on Mew's description of joy and tries to imitate it. He is free, he should be happy. But all that he has is exhaustion and a deep, lonely emptiness. Honestly, I could argue this is true of any time he brings up his mother, but it shows the strongest at the ending. There is no happy ending here, only survival.

Overall I found that this was a nice little atmospheric piece and character study and enjoyed reading it. The mood is conveyed well, and the prose suits the situation. I need to read more of your stuff. Thanks for writing and see you again sometime!
 

kintsugi

golden scars | pfp by sun
Location
the warmth of summer in the songs you write
Pronouns
she/her
Partners
  1. silvally-grass
  2. lapras
  3. golurk
  4. booper-kintsugi
  5. meloetta-kint-muse
  6. meloetta-kint-dancer
  7. murkrow
  8. yveltal
  9. celebi
(didn't really pull line quotes or anything since if I recall correctly that's not your style, but overall I thought the descriptions here were really nice). The images of Mew's memories are really pretty, almost melodic, and it's great how that collides head-on with the visceral depiction of the stormy as this angry, brooding force. A lot of fun. I like how the memories of Mew and what Mew dreamed for Mewtwo sort of fall out as the world opens up and things get bigger, but the repetition comes back at the end in a very punchy way.

I like the central framing of this, and the idea it represents: opening up to the new world reveals so much that's bigger than ourselves. There's a sense of wonder and awe that I remember in a lot of your previous works when running head-on into things that are bigger than yourself, and learning to deal with it--I'm thinking Pokemon's Guide mostly, but come to think of it it's kind of a similar theme in The Best Game as well. But this has a slightly darker twist, with more anger and wrath towards the thunderstorm, more like Zuko shouting at the rain, and I think it works with Mewtwo really well. Sometimes true strength means getting hit by lightning while trying to find the grass.

I think one thing I was confused about--Mewtwo as an embodiment of victory felt like a bit of a forced epithet, especially seeing it back-to-back. I sort of see the background leaps from "the ultimate fighting machine" to "fighting everyone so good they lose" to "therefore I win a lot", but with the narration so close inside of Mewtwo's head I was wondering if it'd see itself that way--it felt detached from the narration in a way that the rest of the story wasn't (since the victory seems like something that the scientists/creators want for it, but not really something that it necessarily has decided to claim for itself). I almost think something focused more on strength/stronger would actually work here, albeit kind of cheesily with the title, since so much of the story is about being stronger than rather than being victorious over. Unsure. Altogether a relatively minor quibble.

Overall I really enjoyed the word choice and focus on this one; I think your prose really popped and your idea here is really tightly-framed. Thanks for sharing!
 

ShiniGojira

Multiversal Extraordinaire
Location
Stranded In The Gaps between Multiverses
Pronouns
He/him/they/her
Partners
  1. froslass
  2. zorua-gojira
  3. salandit-shiny
  4. goomy
Hello! Hope you've been having a splendid day, and I like to say that this was a wonderful read.

I loved the way you portrayed Mewtwo and its perspective after escaping Cinnabar. The storm never felt more powerful to me than in this story here.

Amazing imagery, powerful descriptions and the idea of learning about Mewtwo's reactions to the outside world were all great.

The vagueness of Mewtwo's 'mother' conveyed its loneliness pretty well and gives us something to ponder about and work with when it's shown that Mewtwo knows a bit of the outside world due to it's 'mother' (My guess is that this 'mother' could be either Mew or Amber).

Mewtwo's perspective on itself being the strongest and most powerful Pokémon is nicely portrayed in its destruction when escaping Cinnabar. Then when it got struck by lightning and nearly drowned was a nice way to show that it could survive anything thrown its way.

Mewtwo also seems to not care for anything but winning which makes sense, seeing as it was literally created to be the perfect killing machine. Its destructive prowess and lack of care tells us that it's still rather young and have time to grow, to learn more about life.

The mood and setting worked together so well in this story. The storm, Mewtwo, its 'mother' were great. .

So in general, this was great. You're great and I hope your other works are just as great.

Take care of yourself and keep doing what you love!
 

Chibi Pika

Stay positive
Staff
Location
somewhere in spacetime
Pronouns
they/them
Partners
  1. pikachu-chibi
  2. lugia
  3. palkia
  4. lucario-shiny
  5. incineroar-starr
Know this, thunderstorm. I am Mewtwo. I am the strongest. I am stronger than any pokémon that dares stand before me. I am stronger than the humans who tried and failed to contain me in their halls of hubris, which now lie in blazing ruins. And I am stronger than you.
What a powerful way to introduce Mewtwo's character. (Almost makes me want to know how it'd read if there were a few more 1st-person thoughts, heh.)

I'm reminded a lot of a tumblr post I saw recently break down Azula's classic "do the tides command this ship?" scene. Where at first it seems badass, but really is nothing more than a futile attempt at displaying control over that which can't even be controlled.

More hazy lights blink into view as the grass recedes, heralding an even broader stretch of labs. How many humans must there be, Mewtwo wonders as it soars above building after building after building, how many scientists huddled over how many stolen mothers and living tools and other warped experiments? How much farther must it go to be rid of its tormentors once and for all?
I like how buildings in general are just thought of as more labs--because that's all it's ever know, really. Humans don't live lives of their own, they build labs to suppress others.

The bloated clouds flash again. This time they spit a forked tongue of light that streaks down to the forest, like the bolts of the lab's electrode magnified a thousandfold, followed by a roar that shakes the air itself. Mewtwo blinks the afterimages away and glances back toward the point of impact; now flames race up and devour the trees, burning wild and bright in spite of the rain. Dozens of bird pokémon scatter before the fire.
Really great imagery, love how the lightning is perceived by one who's never seen or conceived of it.

But now, outside, with only a single bubble of raw defiance between it and chaos, its head pounds with the effort of maintaining speed and holding the shield steady. Each thud is a plea to stop, to land, to breathe for just a moment without having to wrestle the grinning, growling monster that wants it gone.
This passage tripped me up a few times, as the arrangement of the sentences made me lose track of the subject. Maybe swap one of the "it"s for a "Mewtwo"?

She'd said nothing of an enemy that dwarfed the humans and their pokémon, that threatened to batter it back, back, back to the confines of the lab, back to all the cages and restraints that bottled its power and rage and terror up inside until it nearly burst. (Back, back, back to the quiet, back to the familiar. Back to the place that kept a roof over its head and the danger far away, at least before it brought that roof crashing down with its own two hands.)
There's a certain immaturity to this that's so fitting--taking everything as a personal slight. Things can't just happen for nebulous reasons--they have to be directed at you, they have to have some kind of intent surrounding you. Furthermore, since everything in Mewtwo's life until now really has been controlled and deliberate, basically anything that could remotely be considered an obstacle is perceived as a threat to its freedom. It's so afraid that everything, even the world wants to send it back. So it has to stand defiant against forces that are utterly apathetic to its fate. That's all it's ever known.

Excellent read, thanks for sharing~
 

canisaries

you should've known the price of evil
Location
Stovokor
Pronouns
she/her
Partners
  1. inkay-shirlee
  2. houndoom-elliot
  3. yamask-joanna
  4. shuppet
  5. deerling-andre
This was beautiful! I don’t think I’d be exaggerating in calling it poetic, even, with how vivid and colorful the prose is and how rhetorical repetition is utilized.

Something that was interesting to me was how the story has multiple different angles of tragedy, others easier to see, others subtler. One easily identified is Mew and her stories of the wonders of nature. We don’t know how much Mew herself actually believed she and her child would indeed be free, but it sure seems Mewtwo did. Even with Mew gone, Mewtwo expected to see these things, and them not turning out the way she promised was yet another slap in the face.

The second angle of tragedy ties into this. Mewtwo’s life up to this point being completely confined to the lab meant that its worldview was restricted into an unrealistic binary of this cold, cruel facility and the picturesque fantasies Mew described. Emerging into the outside world, it didn’t even seem to consider that it could meet something in between. It tries to make sense of it with the only things it knows, seeing the buildings as labs and the storm as another opponent to fight.

And that takes me to the final angle. Mewtwo thinks it is now free, and physically that may be the case, but when you think about it, Mewtwo still believes its sole purpose is its assigned one - to be the strongest. It cannot relent against anything, not even the unthinking forces of nature, causing it needless suffering. It’s even in its pronoun - Mew gets to be a she, but Mewtwo is simply an it, like a machine, and it continues to go with this pronoun.

I didn’t actually think we’d reach Cerulean Cave by the end, but in hindsight, I’m not sure why considering how it is part of Mewtwo’s lore and makes sense to be included. Not that I would have minded if it wasn’t, obviously.

I think that’s it for my thoughts! This piece is wonderful, and I’ve already recommended it forward. Thank you for posting.
 

Spiteful Murkrow

Busy Writing Stories I Want to Read
Pronouns
He/Him/His
Partners
  1. nidoran-f
  2. druddigon
  3. swellow
  4. lugia
  5. quilava-fobbie
  6. sneasel-kate
  7. heliolisk-fobbie
Alright, rounding out those reviews I was throwing your way with the last of your stories in your signature that I haven't gotten to: Stronger.

Full disclosure, I'm going into this blind beyond knowing that it deals with Mewtwo. So this will probably be a bit of a surprise to me. And possibly to you too. But without further ado, let's start reading and reviewing here.

Mewtwo leaps into the air with a surge of energy that thrums and sings around it, power rolling off its body in waves like it's never been allowed to feel before. The smoldering wreckage falls away beneath it and it never looks back.

Somewhere, in the dim and dusty corners of its memory, its mother shares an image of what she calls the sky, an endless stretch of bright blue and wispy white above and all around them. The sky is outside, she says. It is everywhere, and it is beautiful. One day we shall leave this place, and together we will soar through the sky and see all the wondrous things it touches.

Aw, how cute. I mean, it probably killed like 30 people in the process while getting out, but it's still cute. :V

Mewtwo is outside now, but alone—she is long gone, and this is not the sky of which she dreamed. There is no bright and soothing blue, only purple-black muddied by oppressive gray. The atmosphere is cold and heavy; a torrent of water streams down. The gray and purple are cut by a flash of light. The air itself growls, low and long like a cornered arcanine.

Mewtwo: "... I feel robbed right now." >_>;

It is not much of a surprise that even the sky is displeased. The scientists kept Mewtwo locked away for a reason, after all. It is a weapon, they explained, created only to destroy, to win. Why should the world itself not recoil and protest when the embodiment of victory shows its face?

Mewtwo: "Explain Victini, then." >:|
Narrator: "You don't canonically know about that."
- Mewtwo looks up at the pouring rain and pouts -
Mewtwo: "Ugh... fine."

But let the sky growl and glare and weep. Mewtwo is here, now, ascending through the downpour and the dark. It will not go back to languishing in that prison of wires and tubes, whether the sky likes it or not.

Mewtwo knows little else about outside—only that the humans called this place "Cinnabar". What lies beyond? It cannot say. So it soars off in a random direction, for anywhere is better than here, and leaves the past in its wake.

The land-blot below disappears, replaced by an expanse of water that rolls out in all directions and adds its own hissing to the din. The sky-water drums down, soaks through its fur, stings its eyes and leaves it chilled, but Mewtwo rushes onward all the same. Humans could not stop it; why should water? It will be free.

I have to wonder how Mewtwo's mood would've been if it jumped ship from the Cinnabar Mansion on the middle of a bright and sunny day and if it'd feel a bit more chipper.

Its mother never showed it this sort of sky, but it remembers occasional dull, faraway rumblings, heard even through the walls and fluid-filled tanks. It remembers the scientists approaching with their hair damp and clinging to their heads, complaining idly to one another that the rain and thunderstorms outside probably wouldn't let up before break time.

Know this, thunderstorm. I am Mewtwo. I am the strongest. I am stronger than any pokémon that dares stand before me. I am stronger than the humans who tried and failed to contain me in their halls of hubris, which now lie in blazing ruins. And I am stronger than you.

Sounds like a recipe to get hit by a lightning strike given that you're flying in the middle of a thunderstorm, but you do you, Mewtwo. o<o

The thunderstorm rumbles in response. Mewtwo feels the air rushing past it now, pushing against it, buffeting it down toward the water until it steadies itself with a moment's concentration and climbs back up again.

Somewhere, in the dim and dusty corners of its memory, its mother shares the sensation of what she calls the wind. The wind is outside, too. It is soft and playful and carries the birds and the flower seeds and the warmth of the sun. One day we shall leave this place, and as we wander the world we will feel its sweet caress against our faces and will race it through the sky.

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Mewtwo: "Again. One of those things that was definitely not as advertised." >_>;

But she is gone, and this wind is not soft. It tears at Mewtwo like the blades of the kabutops in the lab's arena, swift and biting and raking down its sides. It snags and it pushes, tries to drag Mewtwo back, back to the lab, back to the humans, back to a life of darkness and control and pressure pent up in its skull.

Mewtwo's eyes flash. The energy streaming from its mind swells into a sphere of violet light that staves off the wind and scatters the rain before it ever touches skin.

Okay, nevermind then. Maybe this cat really can just shrug off lightning strikes with psychic powers like that.

It is Mewtwo. It is strong. It is stronger. It will win the race against the wind. It will not be defeated by the storm and the sky.

Now the water below gives way to land, and this, too, stretches out beyond the edges of Mewtwo's vision, far vaster than the smudge of dirt that once held its cell. There are buildings here as well, many of them, far down below. Mewtwo does not know if these are more labs, or if they serve some other wicked purpose. It can only see lights winking around the structures through the dark.

From this height, through all this rain, it cannot tell whether any humans are about. Mewtwo destroyed those who dared try to halt its escape, but it knows full well that there are others, others who watched the scientists watching it and waited to twist it to their own self-important will. Mewtwo was made, after all, to be the god of victory—their victory, over all the other pokémon and humans in the world.

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Oh boy. Time to see where this goes. Though this is why if you try to do experiments on superpowered beings, it tends to help if they have childlike personalities.

Someday soon these others will be found and punished, their bodies broken the way they tried to break Mewtwo's mind, and victory will belong to Mewtwo alone. Until then, better that the little humans down below not get too clear a glimpse, so they can't go running and tell their masters where they might collect their runaway prize.

Mewtwo surges on, faster, farther, until the lab-clusters peter out and leave a span of open space beyond. Grass, she might have dreamt once as she showed it the world beneath the promise of blue skies, green and soft and wonderful. This grass is a dead gray in the murk of the storm, driven flat against the ground by the wind.

Mewtwo: "Yeesh, was there anything about the world that mom got right?" >_>;

The rain drums a relentless rhythm against the shield, the energy sizzling and popping with each strike. Mewtwo tries to duck and weave around the gusts of air as they pick up their tempo, but no matter where it goes the wind is there to meet it. It has to concentrate just to keep from being held down like the grass. How much longer must it put up with this tiresome resistance? No refuge makes itself apparent as it scans the ground below. No overhangs, no roofs. No walls or quiet, insulating tanks to keep the wind at bay and muzzle the sky.

As it should be, Mewtwo reminds itself with a snarl. The storm might dare to test it, its head might throb with the effort of cutting through the squall, but anywhere is better than there. It must go faster, farther, and before long it will find someplace better still.

Somewhere like say... an isolated cave in a mountainside?

More hazy lights blink into view as the grass recedes, heralding an even broader stretch of labs. How many humans must there be, Mewtwo wonders as it soars above building after building after building, how many scientists huddled over how many stolen mothers and living tools and other warped experiments? How much farther must it go to be rid of its tormentors once and for all?

At least in this place the storm is eager to prove itself useful: Mewtwo can hear structures protesting under the weight of the wind, see pieces tear away from roofs and cables snap free of their moorings. A pittance compared to the masterwork Mewtwo left behind on Cinnabar, but certainly the very least the beasts deserve.

I see that "accentuate the negative" is in full effect for this cat. Not that it's hard to blame it given that it's had an extremely negative life experience in and around humans thus far, so it has no logical grounding to assume any other humans would be different.

...they do deserve more, of course. Oh, so much more. Now isn't really the time—it should keep going while the rain and darkness mask its presence and pen the humans up in their holes. But it is Mewtwo, it is stronger than the humans and the storm, and oh, how satisfying it would be to ensure that they both know it. Besides, it has been flying through this mess for some time now. Surely a break, a moment's entertainment, is well-earned.

Narrator: "In other words, it's getting tired and needs a rest-"
Mewtwo: "Oi! Nobody asked you!" >:|

Mewtwo rasps out a laugh and gives in to the impulse, just this once: it hurls a sphere of blue energy through the rain at one of the larger buildings, savors the sight as the attack blasts clear through the structure's side. Then the petulant storm drowns out the satisfying sounds of crunching and crashing, and, sated for now, Mewtwo punches through the gusts and forges on.

A black-green mass sprawls out below now. A forest, she might have dreamt once, promising to take it to shelter and relax in the cool spaces beneath the trees, but this forest groans and shudders and cracks beneath the wind. These trees cannot be much shelter from this storm. It must press on, faster, farther...

Yeeeeeeaaah. I know this is getting a little old hat, but you probably should've checked the weather forecast before trashing the lab on your way out.

The bloated clouds flash again. This time they spit a forked tongue of light that streaks down to the forest, like the bolts of the lab's electrode magnified a thousandfold, followed by a roar that shakes the air itself. Mewtwo blinks the afterimages away and glances back toward the point of impact; now flames race up and devour the trees, burning wild and bright in spite of the rain. Dozens of bird pokémon scatter before the fire.

The message is clear: the thunderstorm, too, is strong. It strikes. It burns. It destroys. But I am Mewtwo. I am stronger. You will not destroy me. I will be free. And it soars on, chest heaving as it howls and leaves its own brief tail of light in its wake.

inb4 it turns out that all of this was being caused by Zapdos happening to be on a bender on the night Mewtwo finally snapped and went full "screw this, I'm out of here" to Cinnabar Mansion.

Mewtwo's furious pace reduces the next sprawl of buildings to blobs of muted colors, their little lights stretched out into strings. A winding wall of stone towers beyond the light-strings in the distance. Mountains, she might have dreamt once, tall and majestic with a view of all the world, and here, at least, dream and reality almost align. How massive must they be, to dwarf all these labs and even the expanse of trees? "Majestic" does not fit so well. All Mewtwo notices is the way their peaks drop and spike, jagged, biting the sky—the snarl of the storm given fangs.

Yeeeeeah, I can already see how this Mewtwo became reflexively hostile to the rest of the world. When your formative memories are of you and your mother being abused, and the universe itself seemingly being out to get you once you escape... I would be a bit grumpy myself.

Back at the lab the roaring was so far away, meaningless aside from the sight of soggy scientists going about their torture-tasks with lots of irritable grumbling. But now, outside, with only a single bubble of raw defiance between it and chaos, its head pounds with the effort of maintaining speed and holding the shield steady. Each thud is a plea to stop, to land, to breathe for just a moment without having to wrestle the grinning, growling monster that wants it gone.

But it can't. Not yet. Anywhere is better than there, but even here, so far away from that dreadful ruin, the human infestation creeps along below, almost as if keeping pace. The impulse to lash out boils up again, the urge to match the storm strike for strike and prove that Victory Itself is not afraid, but the wind screams louder now, shoves harder, hurls more hissing rain against the shield in hopes of smashing through. Mewtwo ignores the noise and quashes its temper and focuses instead on the keening whine of psychic energy, the sound of its own willpower holding out against the fury.

Somehow trying to pick a fight with a thunderstorm all on your lonesome doesn't sound like a winning move, even for Mewtwo.
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- Meanwhile in the background, a yellow and black bird is lurching about in the sky visibly tipsy and singing off-key -
Zapdos: "♫ Welcome to the Hotel California~ Such a lovely pla- ♫"
Mewtwo: "Shut up, slurring bird thing! I will win this! I am stronger!" >:|
Zapdos: "Well aren't you a rude one." ÒvÓ

WHAM. The not-so-distant wall of stone looms up before the distracted Mewtwo can react. Shockwaves roll through the shield and into Mewtwo's body. It drops the energy, tumbles, momentarily forgets which way is up. It kicks off the mountainside to push itself away; the wind barrels headlong into it and sends it spinning back; it snarls, throws up its arms to keep the pummeling at bay, and forces out another shield. More light stabs out of the sky and dashes against the rock—so close, too close, it's hot and it stings and it's too close—and Mewtwo kicks again, lashing tail propelling it in a new direction.

Yeah, don't mess with Zapdos in the middle of his drunken songs. :V

[...Is it new?] Mewtwo cannot tell with its eyes watering and its mind protesting every dash and dodge. But it will have to do. There is always a way and Mewtwo will always find it because it will not, cannot be defeated, is not meant to be defeated. Yet still the stone and storm and searing light strive to steal the only thing it has...

So anywhere, anywhere is better than here.

I think be a bit more explicit about what the 'it' Mewtwo is referring here is, since I kinda got thrown in a loop for a bit. I think it's meant to be talking about the rock face, though.

It is tired. So tired. Everything hurts and everything is wrong, twisted violently away from the visions of this night that had been looping through its head for months. How long Mewtwo had waited for the sensation of its pent-up power finally, finally flowing freely! How vividly it had imagined the sight of barriers cracking and collapsing before it; the heady scent of electrical smoke filling the air as machines buckle and wires snap; the sweet sounds of shattering glass and splintering wood and its captors screaming for mercy. Then, when the humans' handiwork was reduced to blood and slag, it would go where it pleased—someplace where the sky is the bright blue of dreams and the wind's touch is gentle and playful. Someplace where it would be alone, and not together, but at least it would be free.

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That juxtaposition between desiring brutal revenge and someplace comfy to run away to is at once sad and concerning.

She'd said nothing of an enemy that dwarfed the humans and their pokémon, that threatened to batter it back, back, back to the confines of the lab, back to all the cages and restraints that bottled its power and rage and terror up inside until it nearly burst. (Back, back, back to the quiet, back to the familiar. Back to the place that kept a roof over its head and the danger far away, at least before it brought that roof crashing down with its own two hands.)

>when your initial instinct when being faced with negative events is to assume that it's the work of an enemy out to get you

This 'mon needs a shoulder to cry on. And some serious therapy. You know, assuming the little problem of going full Tetsuo Shima on everything in contact can be worked out

But the strong should not be afraid. What is there to fear when you are victory personified? The storm rails with all its fury, but still Mewtwo races the wind and cuts through the rain and laughs, ragged and broken but defiant and

Strength has limits. Which looks like a lesson Mewtwo's about to find out in real-time.

Light screams down and smites the shield, and the world goes white. There is a sharp, metallic smell. Intense heat. Energy that races across Mewtwo's body and burns its fur away. A thousand-thousand searing needles jabbing into every nerve at once, so that even as the shield is scattered and it plummets down, down, down, it hardly feels the battering of the wind and rain.

I warned you about the lightning, bro.

Then it is in water, not the little drops of falling rain but water, heavy and black and churning as madly as the skies. The water is everywhere and Mewtwo cannot breathe. It is nothing like the cool, soporific stasis fluid in the lab, but a hateful cold that burns and suffocates. Mewtwo kicks wildly, struggling in the direction that must be up, it has to be up, the water rolls and tumbles and drags but it has to be up—

Its head breaks the surface and it sucks in air, but a surge slams into it and forces it back under. It pushes up again and gets shoved down again and swallows water that chokes it as it tries and fails to take a breath. The thrashing throws it into something solid, knocking more breath out of its lungs and letting more water in. Mewtwo grabs for the solid object, fingers clawing at slippery stone and earth. It holds on against the current and pulls itself along, inch by inch by inch.

Mewtwo hauls itself up onto gray-not-green grass and thick sludge. Another wall of stone looms before it, gargantuan, impassive and impassable. Mewtwo collapses between the raging water and the stone and does not move except to cough and retch. How long it lies there, too spent to erect another shield against the rain, it does not know.

Yeah, talk about getting cold water thrown on your perceptions there. And with the insult to injury of enduring this as a cat.

There is a dark opening in the stone. Mewtwo cannot see where it leads. It does not know how far it's come from the little patch of land that holds the dead and smoking lab, how many humans might be skulking just out of sight, whether it should be fleeing further still.

But anywhere is better than here.

And thus, Mewtwo came to take up residence at Cerulean cave.

The embodiment of victory lifts a shaking arm and fires one last blast of energy vaguely upward. The blue sphere sputters and careens off, directionless, into the purple-black sky; the storm does not so much as acknowledge the shot. Then Mewtwo crawls forward, pulling its heavy body through the slick grass and the sludge. It enters the darkness, and the water no longer beats its head, then its shoulders, its back, its tail. The rain now rails against only the unmoving rock roof overhead.

Mewtwo: "... So why does this victory feel so hollow?" :<

The floor is rough against its fingers and knees and dragging tail. It scrapes, probably breaks the skin and leaves it raw; Mewtwo's nerves are already buzzing and there is no room left for any new sensation, but it pushes itself up onto quaking legs and limps on. Occasionally it draws upon its sputtering reserves of power, willing itself to float for just a moment above more rushing water, or to fend off the curious creatures whose eyes shine out of the black. There is no real force behind the blasts, but what little Mewtwo conjures seems to be enough—the eye-lights wink out as soon a flash of energy appears, and it is left alone.

It drifts listlessly over one last stretch of water and sinks onto a broad plateau of stone, a far cry from its mother's dreams. But the roaring of the storm is silent here, distant and toothless again at long, long last.

Let the sky seethe and hate and rage. It is here, now, descended past the downpour and the dark. It is uncaged, master of its own destiny. I am Mewtwo. I am strong. I am stronger. I am alive. I am free.

Narrator: "And wet and sopping in a cave-"
Mewtwo: "Look, it's my cave, and I chose to be here! (... Sorta.) It's free enough!" >:|

Somewhere, in the dim and dusty corners of its memory, its mother shares the strange and swooping feeling she calls joy. Joy is everywhere that life is. It is flying through the sky and dancing in the waves and discovering new things and simply spending time with those you love. One day we shall leave this place, and we will fly and dance and see the world. We will laugh and laugh as the joy of freedom fills us, you and I, always together.

Mewtwo tries to laugh, to revel in its flight through the sky and its freedom and its life, but the only sound it manages is a wet, shuddering cough. It pulls its legs and tail in close and drifts into the dreamless dark.

Well that's certainly a low note to end on. Not that one would expect things to go dramatically different when you pick a fight with an ongoing storm all on your lonesome.

As for my overall thought, I thought it was a fun piece. A bit of a downer towards the end, but such is life when you go out into the world brimming with confidence that nothing can stop you. Eventually, you'll find something that will, even if it normally takes a bit longer than it did for Mewtwo here. It's an interesting dynamic between seeing this creature that has great power and is in many ways a child going full "I-I'm not scared of you!" to the broader world in brutal, violent fashion that's stepping out into the world for the first time in life and getting all of its preconceived notions mercilessly picked apart in short order. Though such is life when you don't coordinate your escapes with weather forecasts, or understand your own personal limits.

As for things that I thought could be done better... beyond a couple nitpicks here and there, I don't think that I have too much. The story just feels like it builds up and crescendoes about just right, and nothing about it overstays its welcome. Maybe there could've been room to slip in another encounter with the outside world here and there, but on its own, the piece doesn't exactly feel lacking even if it's short.

Kudos on the one-shot @Phoenixsong , and I'll be looking forward to seeing more of your work pop up here since you seem to have a way of getting a lot out with your prose, even under very constrained quantities.
 

Namohysip

Dragon Enthusiast
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Partners
  1. flygon
  2. charizard
  3. milotic
  4. zoroark-soda
  5. sceptile
  6. marowak
  7. jirachi
  8. meganium
Mewtwo was made to be the god of victory? Nobody tell it about Victini, that's trouble waiting to happen.

Hey Phoenix! Here to top off the oneshot week by looking at as many as I could, and this one caught my eye for starring Mewtwo, though I knew little more. Having finished it, I thought it was a very stylized and "quiet" story, despite how loud it was in-universe. Very little true dialogue, sometimes feeling like first person rather than third, and ending in darkness while being illuminated regarding Mewtwo's perspective on how what little experiences it had ended up shaping the way it saw the rest of the world.

And while each part felt like it was with the greater whole, some of them, for example the segment with the wind lashing at Mewtwo and some of the rhetoric associated with it, felt kind of repetitive. I get some of it for the sake of Mewtwo saying that it was stronger than everything, and the irony of talking about hubris despite all of its own confidence against nature itself. But I don't think this particular repetitiveness was effective, because it felt kind of like I was reading the same passage and actually scrolled up to make sure it wasn't an accidentally duplicates paragraph, or I had somehow lost my place. Things only started changing when lightning finally struck and nature had its victory.

One thing that I liked about this piece that makes it more different from other Mewtwo stories that I read was the fact that it shows Mewtwo as both this powerful and prideful god who seemed to have the world figured out, and a child who knew little beyond the shelter they had been confined to. It's a strong irony that this story utilized the most. In terms of strengths, I think this story had that as its greatest, and worked very well for a one-shot short story. Very good job with that balancing act!
 
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