"Please, just let me rest."
I can already tell that this is going to hit
very differently later on in this story.
Rawi throws the blinds open; sunlight tumbles in through the open window. "What are you, a zubat? Let's get some light in here, yeesh!"
"Five more minutes?"
"Absolutely not. Time's a wasting."
Protag:
I glance at my clock, groan, and bury my head in the pillows. "Some warning would've been nice."
Ah, so this is going to be a first-person PoV story. Duly noted for later points.
"Life's all about cruel surprises." He laughs, maybe at his own joke or the way that I shy away from the light when he pulls the pillows off of me. "Get out of bed, doofus. You're going hiking today."
"It's not safe to hike alone."
He's already bustling around the room with an ease born from familiarity, scooping up dirty shirts and socks before turning towards the laundry hamper. "I'm coming, of course," he says, and has the gall to sound offended.
Not that the narrator is exactly super awake and coherent right now, but I kinda wonder if it’d have been worth slipping in at least some passing description of what their room was like in order to do some scene-setting and potential foreshadowing for what Rawi and the narrator are like. e.x. if they’re a bunch of stuff plucked from the sea lying around.
I'm still staring at him, blearily blinking the last remnants of sleep from my eyes before I try one more excuse: "It's too late in the day; you'll get hungry."
"There's bread and shit in the fridge. I'll make sandwiches or something and then go on our hike."
"I hate hikes."
He pauses, and then: "You should get out more. Maybe seeing the sunlight will help you get a better poker face."
Narrator:
It might be my bias as a more “visual” author talking, but I do wonder if the underlined would’ve been worth expanding, since up to this point, we don’t even know what Rawi concretely
looks like, or what his mood concretely is at the moment.
There was a moment, right before I'd actually had to face daylight, that I could pretend that things were still soft and dark and quiet, but it's gone an instant later as Rawi rips the blankets off of me. "Just leave me alone," I groan.
"No can do. I promised I'd take care of you."
His version of taking care of me involves talking my ear off until I reluctantly crawl out of bed. I know this. I understand this. This is what our family does.
I can
also tell that that’s going to hit differently later on in this story. ^^;
"I'm not brushing your teeth for you, but you'd damn well better do that too." His voice is muffled as he rummages around the closet for a clean pair of socks. "You know what they used to tell us—"
Well,
that was a fast confirmation there. Given that from the title, we’re almost certainly in Alola and this story is supposed to be an exercise in depression, are we going to get
Aloha ‘Oe going in the background at some point?
"Don't break routine for anything," I finish for him wearily.
I know the drill. This was how we'd rammed ourselves through things when we were younger—by pretending to be tauros going seventy miles per hour down the path, blazing through anything. The instant you slowed down, all hell broke loose. When the dark days came, when getting out of bed was hard, this was how we persisted—the small tasks had to be done, and then the bigger tasks, and eventually you could just endure through anything.
"So why'd you drag me out of bed?"
Kinda think that this paragraph works better hacked up with the description set apart from the dialogue.
"I just thought it was a beautiful day outside and you'd like to see it. I was thinking about finding Pounamu and taking another swim out on the cove, to our old spot. You've got folks coming in tomorrow and you'll probably need to spend some time talking to them, so I wanted to knock this out early."
"Early?" My words are garbled by the toothbrush, but we've seen each other do worse. I glance out the freshly-opened window for emphasis. It's almost noon.
Which… uh… considering the CWs for this story, is a sure sign that our narrator is doing well™ at the moment.
"Yeah, I dunno if we'll have much time to go visit our spot after this, and it's already getting pretty late in the day."
"Let's just go tomorrow, then," I say at the exact same time I hear, "So I figured we could squeeze in a few hours before sunset and see the comfey bloom."
I sigh.
Rawi looks at me sternly. "We've done this before. You and I both know you'll actually be really excited once you get out there."
"I know."
"And you'll hate yourself if you just sit around and waste today."
Yeah, depression is an ass like that. While I do wonder if it’d have made sense to tip your hand a little faster and harder in the narration since it’s written from the protag’s PoV, it’s already pretty apparent between the lines.
"I know, Rawi."
There's an awkward silence that I don't really know how to break, nor do I have the heart to. Rawi takes the opportunity to continue assembling our packs. I can't help but watch as bottles of water disappear into the worn canvas alongside a flashlight and a battered compass.
"We don't need the compass," I mutter sullenly. This is our spot. We know the way by heart, and so does Pounamu.
"Don't be so sure. You never know when we're gonna lose ourselves."
Oh yeah,
that’s ominous there.
I roll my eyes; he has a way of weaving something poetic into the most mundane of statements.
Just filing that one away, since something about this line gave off vibes that it’ll be touched on again before the story’s over.
"Fine. Would it make you feel better if I instead told you that ninety percent of outdoor search and rescues are performed because day hikers don't bring proper equipment?"
He's smiling, a little, but for some reason I can't. "Not in particular," I mutter. Something about his statement is wrong; it doesn't fit together, like a puzzle with five corner pieces. But—
But as he drags me by the wrist outside, both of our bags slung over one shoulder, I realize he's right. I've forgotten how nice the sun is, how good the Alola breeze feels on my skin. It's a thing that I hear a lot from tourists, the sort of thing that outsiders will never understand, how we've learned to take the land the Tapus gave us for granted. The sunrises that draw influencers and photographers in a thousand mile radius are things we see every day. Sometimes it's easy to forget that there are other places in the world where I'd have to hike for miles to get even a glimpse of a clear sky, or where the thoughts of seeing the moonset beneath the summer stars would be nothing more than a dream washed out by city lights.
Ah yes, and
there’s the part where we just throw it out there that we’re in Alola. It certainly sounds like a comfy and chill environment to be in.
We're the island's children, after all, and sometimes children can lose sight of just how much family is supposed to—
Aaaaaand we’re about to get into:
I can already tell.
The sound of waves brings me back as we thread our way down the trail to the beach. I hadn't even remembered putting on shoes, but my hiking boots sink in the damp sand. The cove is beautiful at this time of year. The tide is low in the afternoon, so the shore is already pocked with remnants of the morning's waves, ridged and bumpy like the core of a fruit. The crabrawler tend to be active at dawn and dusk, so their tracks are washed clean. Mine are all that remain. I glance over my shoulder, seeing my footprints traced delicately across the sand, one carefully in front of the other. Something—
"Come on!" Rawi shouts, and I turn back towards him, towards the sparkling ocean.
Huh. I wonder what the narrator’s thought process was going to be there, since that was sure an abrupt interruption.
I miss the cove. When Rawi and I were kids, we would spend days on end out here. Crystal clear waters slowly faded to sapphire. Sky stretched as far as the eye could see. Rocky cliffs were our proving grounds, who could jump further and bolder—but they gave way to soft, white sands worn smooth by the tides. As the sun set, around the golden hour, we watched the cutiefly trickle across the coast, their legs covered with the pollen harvest from the afternoon. In the spring, the mudsdale would bring their young to the cliffs to teach them how to stomp; in the winter, lanturn and chinchou migrated to the warmer waters of the cove and filled it with twinkling lights. At night, we were far enough away from the world that we could stargaze with a naked eye, trace out the constellations with our fingers and chart our own meaning for guardians that were a billion years old.
But the most glorious game of all was—
"Pounamu!" Ahead of me, Rawi wades up to his knees in what I know must be frigid water, but he doesn't flinch. His dark curls flutter in the wind. He cups his hands to his mouth and shouts again. "Pounamu!"
Narrator: “Rawi! I’m in the middle of a monologue here!”
There's nothing but the quiet waves for a second, and then the cove erupts in a spray of salty foam, droplets of water silhouetted against the afternoon sun. A brilliant blue shape carves out of the sea, arched neck rippling upward, like the crest of a wave. The gentle taper of a horn shakes the last flecks of sea from itself; tightly-curled ears nestle on either side of a gentle, intelligent face. With a triumphant bray, the lapras rises from the waters at Rawi's side.
"Pounamu!" Rawi throws his arms around the beast's grey-speckled neck, ignoring the way that the water makes the edges of his pajamas cling fiercely to his legs. His voice grows uncharacteristically quiet. "You're back. I missed you."
Huh. I wonder if Pounamu is actually trained, or if he’s a wild that they’ve befriended.
The lapras croons and lowers a head the size of a desk with unprecedented care. Brown eyes four times larger than mine close as he nuzzles gently against the top of Rawi's head, which is almost engulfed in the crook between Pounamu's massive jaw and his scaled neck.
"Sorry, we're back. You were here all along, weren't you?" Rawi corrects himself quickly, as if the lapras would actually be offended. He wraps his arms around Pounamu, whispering his own secrets into the lapras's shimmering scales.
I can already tell that this Lapras is more or less Rawi’s shoulder to cry on in their current circumstances, since boy does he vibe as very close there.
Pounamu was our anchor against the storm, the real reason we ventured out to the cove so often. Choppy seas and calm waters—the lapras could handle them both. I don't remember who found him first; I just remember giddy and unadulterated joy as he breached the seas, slowly at first, and then faster and faster, until we skimmed across the waves like an arrow aimed at the horizon. He taught me a lesson that nothing else could: there were giants in the world, creatures bigger and deeper than my limited understanding, but they could be gentle, and they could be good.
I can already tell the underlined applies in multiple meanings of the term. Though I suppose that that confirms that Pounamu is a wild that they befriended.
Later, I would learn that a lapras is so rare that a single sighting is said to be a miracle. Pounamu is undoubtedly the last of his kind in this cove. There are places for him to go, stormier seas for him to search for the rest of his kin, and yet he always manages to be here for a pair of kids who never fully understood what it meant to grow up.
Not sure how to fully square that away with the Moon/Ultra Moon Pokédex entries, but I suppose “something something, it’s set before their population rebounded” or “that just didn’t happen in this universe” is an easy enough handwave.
Had he spent the whole time waiting for the day when we'd come back to him, because he could fill a void that nothing else could? Surely not. Something as beautiful as him couldn't be so lonely that he could pour his heart out to others and expect nothing else in return.
I mean, you and your brother are basically doing that right now, so is it really that shocking? ^^;
I gently rest my hand on the edge of the lapras's grey shell, the crevasses in the gnarled surface familiar to my smooth hands. I remember what it felt like to clamber up onto his back, hair blowing in the breeze, adventure on the horizon. "Hi," I whisper weakly. "I missed you too."
You'd think that the lapras would pick favorites, and that he would pick Rawi (who wouldn't?), but his bray is just as overjoyed when he hears me too. Enormous flippers churn the water to foam before he stills himself just long enough for me to climb on. And suddenly I feel ten feet taller and three feet shorter at the same time; we're both kids again.
I’m surprised at how well you’re able to capture the magical vibe the narrator is feeling here. I suppose it doesn’t hurt that Pounamu from what we’ve seen of him in this initial introduction is genuinely endearing.
"To the horizon, Pounamu!" Rawi whoops, motioning through the air with his hand.
Ah yes, getting in our re-enactment of
that cutscene from the PMD Explorers games.
The lapras brays alongside his cry, and we surge forward into the sea. Cerulean flippers skim through the water, sending spirals and eddies all around us, and salty wind fills my nose. [ ]
"You okay?" Rawi is staring back at me, one hand on Pounamu's neck for support, the other floating free in the wind. He's perched precariously on the lapras's side, one knee crooked, toes skimming the ocean. The flannel of his pajamas flap in the breeze.
I realize how I must look in comparison: knotted up in the center of Pounamu's shell, knees tucked to my chest, knuckles white as they grasp one of the larger gnarls on the lapras's back. Wrapped up in thought, I've forgotten to see. I sigh and lay down across Pounamu's back, feeling the way that his knobbly shell digs tiny dents into my spine, watching the clouds go by.
"This is nice."
If the narrator is meant to be startled by Pounamu taking off or else has some wobbly balance or something, it’d probably be worth noting that in the narration a bit more.
"I didn't want you to spend your day alone. Messes with the mind, you know." He taps one finger to his temple and, eyes twinkling, gives me that knowing smile that I've come to hate so much.
I fold my arms across my chest. "I'm not alone."
Could’ve fooled me with your general demeanor earlier in this story, narrator.
"Oh, please. I don't count."
"You should." I glower at him, but he doesn't back down, so I reach out for Pounamu. The lapras is there like a lifeline, a pillar of support basking on the waves. "And besides, I have Pounamu."
Yeeeeeah, I can already tell that Pounamu is basically Rawi’s emotional support buddy.
Rawi's eyes twinkle a little. "You could talk to people, too."
[ ]
"I do."
"It's been a while."
"They've been busy."
[ ]
"You could bug them more."
"I'll do better next time."
I kinda wonder if there should be a bit more reaction from some combination of Rawi and the narrator to show off their moods / get into their heads a bit more. There’s admittedly a lot of options for potential places where it could happen, but the two I highlighted felt like they’d work particularly well from an eyeballing.
That's a lesson I learned from him, back when we were kids and scraping our knees on concrete and riding our bikes into the neighbor's miltank—into being somewhat the operative word there. Bad was bad, but you could always do better, and better was the best you could ask for.
"Well." Rawi shifts his weight. I don't look up at him, but I can hear the bags rustling. These are the sounds I know by heart: the faint purr of his backpack's zipper opening, the whisper of rushing water, the faint roar as the handheld propane heater begins boiling. "I'm making hot chocolate."
How on earth are you able to balance that while out at
sea? On the back of a
plesiosaur? ^^;
"I don't want any." My mouth is suddenly dry, though, and I'm not sure why.
"I brought okolehao."
The alcohol's name is like a magic spell. "Give. Now."
Ah yes,
that’s definitely very Hawaiian there. I see where the ‘alcoholism’ warning comes into play here.
There's a warm mug in my hands, and Rawi tosses the flask into my lap. "Save some for me." There's a way that his voice tilts there that almost catches my attention.
"You put too much hot chocolate in here," I mutter instead as I try to top myself off.
The narrator would’ve just sucked that
okolehao straight from the bottle if Rawi let him, wouldn’t he? ^^;
"You sound like that's an accident." Rawi catches the flask lazily when I throw it back at him in frustration. "You know, this stuff will kill you one day. Judging by how much of your stash was in the recycling, I'd say that you're drinking more than you should."
Aaaaaand there it is. Even if I have to wonder just how
old the narrator is to already be going through booze.
"Message in a bottle, if you just know where to look."
He frowns. "This isn't what they mean when they say 'spirits help us'—"
I feel my mood sour despite the day. "You aren't even old enough to drink, let alone lecture me for doing it."
Huh. Somehow I pictured Rawi as being the
older of the two siblings. I suppose that I ought to check my priors there.
Rawi huffs dramatically, but he's smiling. "This is what I get for trying to do you a favor."
That's what always made us different. Rawiri, whose full name means 'beloved', always loved helping people. He loved making them happy. And he made jokes and mocked himself and sometimes didn't let me see, but he stopped living for himself and started living for everyone else a long time ago. Maybe that was what undid us in the end.
Well
that’s a positive sign for what’ll happen to these two. Not that the story summary wasn’t already a great™ omen. /s
"Sometimes I think I'm doing this wrong," I say aloud, before I can reel the words in. It's good to talk, I tell myself. It's good to get things off of your chest, and if not for Rawi, then for whom?
[ ]
"What do you mean?"
Small typo there, even if I wonder if it’d have been worth slipping in a moment showing off Rawi’s reaction or something like that.
"We're in the middle of our cove, waiting for the sunset and daydrinking. I have to go to work soon."
"You've got the week off." Rawi helpfully supplements information that I've already forgotten. "And honestly, most people would kill to spend a day like this."
"Right." Pause. "I've been in bed all week, and the strangest thing is that I feel like that's what I've been doing for months now."
Another pause. That's the flaw we have, so consistent in our family that it may as well be carved in our genes. We don't like admitting when we're wrong, even if being wrong doesn't mean doing the wrong thing. It hurts to say out loud when I finally admit,
"I think I'm depressed."
My guy,
I figured that out just from the narration like three hundred words in. Though I suppose that this is the meta reason behind why the narrator’s been so stingy with showing off his mood. He’s not being honest even with himself about how he feels.
"You aren't." He's firm, again, as if what I've said is equal parts unlikely and hurtful to him.
"I am."
He doesn't know. I'm the older one. I did this long before he did. I remember what it feels like to be lonely, to want to quit, to try to quit. I never told him. We were stony about those kinds of things, even when we were playing pirates on the back of a lapras who returned for no reason than because he could.
Well, that explains why the narrator is the one of the two who drinks. Though that was definitely different from what I was expecting there.
"Don't be." Rawi's response is so preposterous that I nearly burst out into laughter right then, until Rawi continues, "Depressed people don't get out of bed or feed themselves or go outside." He gestures to the scene around us, as if it'll prove his point and assuage my feelings instantly.
He should know better. I don't respond.
Yeeeeeeeeeeah, that’s basically a bunch of words saying that “I’m depressed, too, I’m just in denial about it”, just saying.
[ ]
"Please." Rawi pauses. "Don't be. I don't want you to hurt like that."
We all want things, Rawi, I almost tell him, but I can't quite make myself break him like that. "Thanks, Rawi," I say instead. "It's been so long since I could just do something like this." I rest my head against Pounamu's rubbery neck, smiling at the way the breeze tickles my hair.
I kinda feel like the moment where Rawi hesitates goes a bit uncommunicated while it might have been worth showing off, especially given that whatever Rawi did, it was enough to make the narrator bite his tongue and swallow his feelings.
Rawi stops when I say that. I see the slouch return back into his shoulders, the same one I carry, so forgettable that it's practically written into our family's genes. He sighs.
"How long was it this time?"
"This time?"
He stares at me, his eyes level. "You and I both know that this isn't the first time."
Narrator: “Rawi, what are you even-?”
There's an edge in his voice that makes me stop for a moment, and I start backpedaling. "I don't know exactly—"
He sees straight through my bullshit. He always has. "I bet you do."
I don't meet his eyes.
I kinda wonder if it’d have been worth just having Rawi throw things out there for what he’s getting at, since I’ll admit that I wasn’t fol-
"How many days have you lost?" His voice is suddenly colored with anger, uncharacteristic of him. There's a hint of a fire burning in his core just visible in his pupils.
Ah. Well, nevermind that one then.
"I don't know…"
"How many people have you not talked to, how many sunrises have you not seen, how many ideas have you not had, how many paths of your life have you wasted because you've been curled up in your bed all day? How—"
"Five!" I shout back, and then cover my mouth. The sound is far too loud for the quiet day. I can hear the waves lapping against Pounamu's fins. "Five days," I whisper again. It hurts to say out loud at last. "And you're absolutely right. I should've done something with them."
I mean, you
did do something with them. Just not something that you and especially not Rawi is happy about.
His anger fades almost as quickly as it came on. "Don't feel so bad about yourself. Five days isn't the end of the world." Warning slips back in; his face contorts with the memory of buried pain. "As long as you don't let it go on for too long, okay?"
Yeah, I kinda got the feeling that Rawi was heavily depressed himself, even if he’s clearly dealing with it in a different way than the narrator.
"You can't stop me," I mutter darkly.
"I never could."
He sounds sad, and he is sad, but he was also right. Not just because ignoring each other is what family does best. Not just because Rawi's heart of gold was too soft, too malleable, to pierce through my steel curtain. No. It was worse than that, something I'd spent a lot of wasted sunrises and sunsets avoiding, but you couldn't keep things buried forever.
I get the feeling that we’re well on our way to the part of the story where we get to “It was raining, and they went for a drive.” or something adjacent to it.
"You're dead," I say, sounding out the words on my lips and hating myself for it.
What.
"Yup."
[ ]
"There was an avalanche on Mount Lanakila."
"It is the season for it, yeah."
[ ]
"You were there."
WHAT.
"Mmhmm."
"You didn't survive."
[ ]
"Stupid of me, right?" He shrugs carelessly.
"You've been dead for nearly a week."
"Five days, actually." His voice is surprisingly matter-of-fact. "But you knew that."
Well
that was something that I didn’t see coming there. I
do wonder if it could’ve been foreshadowed a bit harder that Rawi was all in the narrator’s head, but boy did
that take a turn fast.
"The funeral is tomorrow. That's why you wanted me to see the comfey. That's why everyone's coming in town."
Logistics are starting to crash in like waves, all the things I should've spent the past five days gathering. I will need to speak to the caretakers at Hau'oli. I will need a lei. I will need to organize music—
"Yeah. You should probably clean up. Or don't, really. I doubt they'll expect picturesque perfection from you this time."
Uh… so how much of a disheveled mess
is the narrator right now anyways?
But most of all, I will need Rawi. I lean into Pounamu's neck and close my eyes, but I can't drown out his voice. "You're dead."
[ ]
"Mmhmm, that hasn't changed last I checked."
"But you made me sandwiches. You brought Pounamu here. You're talking to me."
I mean, have you considered that the possibility that: A: that’s Rawi’s ghost, B: more likely, you’re just starting to lose it from grief right now?
"That was all you, actually. I've always told you that you're stronger than you give yourself credit for."
He almost sounds regretful this time, but I don't think he's as hung up on the discontinuity as I am. He's focused on other things, as always, eyes set on new horizons, for messages written in the skies by myths we'll never see.
"But I figured I'd come along. I thought it would help, honestly."
Well, that was a fast confirmation for column B there. Even if I wonder if this particular paragraph would’ve worked better separating out the dialogue and description out from each other.
Narrator: “Seriously, Rawi, how is knowing that you’re really just in my head supposed to
not make me feel like crap right now?” >_>;
We drift on the water for a while. I lean back and dip one hand in the water, letting it trail off Pounamu's side, and listen to the sound of the waves lapping against the lapras. It hurts to swallow around the lump in the back of my throat. I should've realized that there was only one set of footprints threading through the sandy beach, that now that I'm grown Pounamu only has space for one.
I remember completing the island challenge and confiding in Rawi that the thing that scared me the most was the lack of goals. There were no more trial captains to pit myself at, no more totem pokémon to study and overcome, that there was no more sense of a timeline, of the world's expectations weighing on me, of being someone else's pride. There was a blank road ahead, full of empty days with no target, and the only person who could fill it was … me.
Well,
person, maybe. Clearly the
okolehao has been doing a hefty amount of work “helping” you with that.
It's here, though, hugging the briny shell on Pounamu's back, that I realize how wrong I'd been. Deadlines are everywhere now. You have to go climb out to that island sometime soon because one day your body will start to fail you and you won't be able to make the hike. You have to write down that great idea because one day your mind and creativity will get snuffed out. You have to revel in every day with Rawi, the real Rawi, because one day—
"You were depressed," I say aloud, mind switching gears so fast I can feel my thoughts getting roadburn.
Oh boy, I see all the regrets are coming flooding back right about now.
"I mean, that's not a surprise to either of us." Rawi smiles weakly.
It was a surprise to me, a little. But I'm not laughing. I sit bolt upright, feeling the cold realization leaking across Pounamu's reassuring presence. "You said that depressed people don't get out of bed, don't feed themselves, don't go outside. But you did all of that."
I mean that’s just statistically wrong given that almost 1 in 5 adults in the US last year reported having or being actively treated for depression, so…
"Oh." I imagine the way his face contorts as the logical fallacy unfold between us. "Hmmmm. Interesting."
There's a long pause.
"Rawi?"
He doesn't answer me.
"Rawi."
Narrator: “Rawi,
say something to me, dammit!”
He's deep in thought, face knurled in a fierce frown, and even as he sits across from me on the lapras' back, he's both too real and not real enough. "Huh. You're right; I did say and do all of that. What does that mean for us, then? For you?"
That you’re experiencing and grappling with depression differently? Even if I kinda wonder if the narrator’s problems with the bottle weren’t unrelated to Rawi’s depressive episode. To say nothing about the implication that their parents are no longer around for them anymore.
It hurts. It hurts to think about. "Rawi," I beg.
He chews on his lip like he's trying to digest it, and then he looks at me with a newfound expression of pain on his face. He knows just as well as I do what it means. "Well. Fuck."
Narrator: “Well, I think that’s a sign to just turn Pounamu around, suck down a fresh bottle of
okolehao and go straight back to bed.” >_>;
Two days after his funeral, Rawi drags me out of bed again.
"Come on," he says, tugging at my hand. "You're not gonna want to miss this."
Narrator: “Why am I even doing this when you’re just in my head again?”
Rawi: “Because a part of you doesn’t just want to in bed and drink and cry all day again?” ^^;
"You're dead, Rawi."
But Rawi never let things as trivial as that slow him down. "There's supposed to be this crazy legendary pokémon on the sea tonight," he's chattering. He feels so real when he pulls at my hand, spouting facts and lore that he'd spent his whole life poring over, that I'll spend my whole life shying away from. "It's this crazy little djinn from a far away world. Can you imagine a sea made of sand? They say that Hoopa can travel through all kinds of dimensions in the blink of an eye, and it's going to appear—"
"Rawi." I don't know how to tell him. I don't know how to tell me. "You died."
Narrator: “
None of this is real right now. Hell, I’m probably not even
sober right now!” >_>;
"That was last week," he says patiently, as if explaining things to a small child. "And I got bored, see? And you looked like you were pretty bored yourself, lying in bed all day, and the Hoopa sighting was on the news." He's poking my shoulder; the covers don't move. "C'mon."
Oh, so there
was an actual Hoopa involved in all of this here.
"Rawi, we buried you."
"It was a very nice funeral. I liked your speech."
I want to throw something at him, but I know he's not even there. He's not even there. He's not there. Right? [ ]
"I'm sorry," his voice says softly. "I didn't mean to make you upset."
Another spot where IMO it’d have been worth showing off “Rawi”’s reaction a bit more.
"We buried you." Pause. "I cried."
But I know his response even before he says it, because he's as much a part of me as he's always been.
"And?" he asks, the same old smile painted across his face. "Please. You know me. I'm full of life. Like a little dirt would stop me."
Which is
prooooobably a worrying sign for what will become of the narrator given how there’s a suicide CW in for this story, but let’s not think too hard about that right now. .-.
But it does. It does. It does, and we both know it, but neither of us want it to—
In Alola the word for 'hello' and 'goodbye' and 'love' is the same. As a child that had made perfect sense to me, until I learned about the trichotomy that had evolved in languages across the sea. Now, with Rawi in front of me, I understand why our people smudged all three words, and specifically those three words, together like the oranges and blues of a sunset.
Ah yes,
that’s definitely true to life. Even though I see you danced around the ‘is it alola or aloha’ angle of Alola’s worldbuilding there.
On the day of the funeral, I realized something: Rawi had always been the youngest kid in our generation. The darling; the last one to do things. It's stupid. As stupid as trying to reverse the clock, maybe even stupider than that. But I want him here. I am too old to be the youngest.
Oh, so that’s why he had such a thing for Pounamu, huh?
"Okay." I sit up. "You're right. Let's go see this Hoopa."
This is how I end up on Pounamu's back again, clutching tightly to the lapras's neck like a lifeline. I can hear Rawi behind me when I close my eyes, and I can see him when I open them. The silhouettes of his toothy smile are sharp against the setting sun.
This is good. This has to be good, right? I smile back at him. "Where would you ask Hoopa to take you?"
“Someplace where you’re not dead” would be a decent candidate, though I
assume that the narrator doesn’t know about the multiverse angle that was as prominent as it was in Alola.
His head quirks to one side; it's too real; I turn away. "That's an interesting question. Where would I want to be except here, with you?"
There's something wrong here, something I can't put my finger on. It's like trying to squeeze a handful of sand in your fist; it all trickles away back into the beach. Normally I'm the one with my head wrapped up in metaphors like this, trying to attribute meaning to a cycle of random patterns; Rawi's the kind of person who chases them just because they're there.
Well, yes. That’s why you
cup your hands in order to hold said sand. Though also holding onto
this one here.
Rawi started his island trial early and ended it late. He could've been done in a fraction of the time, a trainer of prodigious skill—he'd met and befriended Pounamu, one of the rarest species in Alola, by the time he was six—but he'd taken his time, sussing out Alola's secrets. Even now, as I'm trying to untangle the image of his peaceful face enshrined in funerary lei with his wind-tossed, lopsided grin wide as he drags me on a sidequest, I know he's dead, but it feels so in-character for him to wrench me out of bed to chase a rumor.
Wow, Rawi certainly started young as a trainer there. I’m getting flashbacks of Poppy right now.
There was a fire inside of him that sent him rocketing into the unknown at the earliest opportunity, the kind of fire that made it impossible to be happy standing still. When asked where in the world he wanted to be, Rawi would say anywhere except—
Rawi chatters past my confusion. "I met this old hiker on Melemele who said he'd heard of Hoopa, once. He said that Hoopa once snuck into a castle and vanished away everything inside. There was another bit about djinn that granted wishes, and a peasant and a princess and an arcanine, and one about a king and his talonflame, and a captured queen who knew one thousand stories…"
That actually makes me wonder if these details were all things that Rawi once told the narrator that his psyche is stitching together to fill in the gaps here.
"A thousand?"
"Right?" Rawi mistakes my disbelief for awe. "I like to think that maybe she was Hoopa all along, if she knew so many stories. Because what is a fantasy except briefly being allowed to go to another dimension, to tell a tale of what you saw there?"
Well, I’m beginning to understand where that trip to the bottom of the ocean is coming from, and why it’ll turn out well™ from the general vibe of the summary.
As I try to digest, there's no sound for a moment except Pounamu's fins cutting through the water.
"You can make wishes on Hoopa too." His smile is crooked. "But you're supposed to be careful what you wish for. Hoopa's the tricky kind of djinn. One of those kinds of stories, you know?"
"You get what you wish for," I saw hollowly, looking up at him and his smile. "But it's not what you need."
There are two realities stretching out before us. One in which Rawi gets to chatter in my ear night after night, telling me a new story until the end of time; and one in which his voice goes unheard because—
"Tell me about the avalanche." My knuckles are white on Pounamu's shell.
Narrator, would “Rawi” even
know what happened there as opposed to you projecting yourself onto him?
For the first time today, Rawi flinches back. The smile fades. "Can we not?" he asks. "It's embarrassing, you know? Star of our generation makes a careless mistake that every ten year-old gets warned against and dies of exposure. Stupid me. I should've known better."
Yeah, that sure sounds like the narrator projecting himself onto “Rawi” there.
"Stupid you." I repeat his words quietly, but I can't make myself believe the lie we're telling me.
He's smiling, shaking his head, silent.
The wind picks up a little, and what were once clear skies are suddenly blotched all over with gray.
Ah yes, sounds like rain’s inbou-
Pounamu brays in alarm at the onset of the sudden storm, but I can't do anything but wrap my arms tighter around his neck. "But you did know better, didn't you?"
Well, that sounds quite a bit worse than rain there.
The past week has been an exercise in all the signs I've been ignoring, all the messages that the world has sent me in warning that I've been trying to ignore. Like the hula lessons when we were kids: we danced around it at the funeral; we danced around it at the cove; we're dancing around it here.
Rawi, my sweet, smiling, sad Rawi, left all of his pokémon in town and climbed Mount Lanakila. Alone, without supplies, in the middle of avalanche season.
… Maybe I was
wrong about what the implied suicide from the CW was going to be about, since, uh… yeah. That sure sounds like a successful suicide attempt there. .-.
"You were never planning on coming down, were you?"
The crystalline seas have turned dark. Pounamu brays in alarm. The storm either came out of nowhere or has been growing all this time, while I was oblivious; I don't remember which. But now there's no more ignoring the buffeting wind, the sudden sheets of sea foam. Pounamu banks hard to the right as a wave threatens to overturn us, and icy water drenches through my clothes and fills my nostrils.
"This must be it!" Rawi shouts above the growing storm, his voice as cheerful as ever. "This must be Hoopa!"
Narrator, that’s just a storm.
I squint against the spray of the storm. Dark clouds blot out the sky, and the waves around us are already ten feet high. We need to turn back. Pounamu screams again; there are some waves that are too high even for him.
Something is bubbling out of the depths. Tendrils of water swirl around it, lifting it ever-higher in the vortex streaked with seaweed. Tiny bubbles of kelp pepper its surface, and the shelled wreck crests above, barnacles crusted across its glassy shell that it keeps firmly, firmly clamped down, refusing to let anyone see.
Narrator: “Can’t tell if this is actually happening, or if I’m just depressed and smashed out of my mind again.” .-.
Another wave washes over the three of us, and I hold as tightly to Pounamu as I can as gallons and gallons of seawater drench me to the bone.
"I just wanted you to be happy," Rawi's saying in my ear, voice impossibly clear despite the storm. "Like me."
Well, that’s clearly going well™ at the moment, now isn’t it?
Another wave crests, and I have one moment to stare at it, just one, before it crashes down like tauros going seventy miles per hour down a path, blazing through—
I'm thrown from Pounamu's back and into the choppy waters.
Narrator:
The first wave holds me under so long that I almost accept drowning. When I surface, hair plastered across my mouth, I have just enough focus to concentrate on a damp inhalation before the water hurls me back under again.
"Rawi!" I scream, but the storm rips the sound from my words. "Pounamu!"
I’m honestly surprised that Pounamu
wasn’t freaking out more about the weather visibly taking a bad turn. I suppose the narrator was quite literally not in the right mindframe to really notice it, but it might have been worth foreshadowing a bit more.
A wave flings me up. The songlike cry of the lapras is tangled in the wind, but I can't make myself land. The sky is no more than a thick wall of clouds, but even through the darkened sea I can see it before me—knurls of crystal curled up like a clenched fist protect its interior; a pockmarked and mottled cork is shoved deep into the vessel's throat. And inside, the script too blurred through thick glass, a scrap of paper with shards of black text.
Hoopa's behind this storm, and the bottle has to do with Hoopa. I know it. If I just manage to crawl my way forward and reach it, fulfill Rawi's quest, we'll be able to make everything right again. Things will go back to the way they were. I'll get my closure and all of this will make sense.
Except it won't. I know it won't. And that knowledge makes me so heavy that I almost sink to the bottom of the sea.
Pounamu is braying frantically in alarm, bodily slamming himself through wave after wave while I float there, paralyzed. The current drags me inexorably toward Hoopa's bottle.
It’s going to turn out to be some random message in a bottle, isn’t it?
Things won't go back to the way they were because they can't. Rawi won't take me to the cove ever again because he can't. The world won't be a beautiful place in the exact same way it used to be because it can't, not now that we've lost what we've lost.
Rawi is a scared little boy as he puts on his pajamas and hikes to the top of Alola's tallest mountain, and he quietly waits for the inevitable while I'm not there to protect him. I had my chance to fix that. And now I am an arrow with no target, anger with no outlet. I can tell as many stories as I want and I will never be able to escape that facet of reality.
Boy, this emotional spiraling is something else. Definitely a clever call having the narrator’s emotional state get mirrored by the surrounding world.
The waves have thrown me over to Hoopa's bottle, and even though it feels sacrosanct I grab it like a lifeline. Something beats against the glass walls, muffled screams whose vibrations I can feel beating into my fingertips even when the sound is silenced within the storm. There's a message within whose contents I have known the whole time, whose words I have spent all these days running from.
"I never knew what to tell you." Rawi's voice, impossibly calm, is louder and clearer than my own breathing, louder than the sea; I open my mouth for a retort and find my voice barely audible over the whirling tempest; the storm swallows my words and dashes them up against the waves. "I had a note that I wanted to give you, one last story, but I never knew how to end it happily, so I threw it into the ocean instead."
Can’t tell how much of this is real and how much of it is all in the narrator’s head, since
boy is it going to be such a knife twist if the message in the bottle turns out to be form an unrelated literal who.
I sense rather than see his attention catch on the bottle in my hands, thrumming like a heartbeat against my soaked fingertips, and I hear panic finally slip into his voice. He knows what I'm about to do, after all, because I know, too.
"Please. Be—"
I wrench the cork off of the prison bottle and set Hoopa free.
Pulsing energy explodes out of the neck of the bottle, so much that I can almost feel it shatter in my grasp, and then I watch it surround the ghost wearing the face of a boy I once knew, morphing him darker, larger, unbound. Hoopa towers over me and Pounamu and the seas alike, but in that moment I have no eyes for this legend; all I care about is written on a scrap of paper in the heart of the bottle that has ripped itself out of my hands and flown headlong into the sea.
Um… narrator? I think that you should be considerably more worried about that Hoopa that may or may not be real right about now, just saying.
I ignore Pounamu's muffled cries and instead paddle towards it, even as the monstrous form of the freed djinn swivels its attention to me. Arms reach through a thousand dimensions, a thousand realities that are out of my grasp, and then they all reach for me, nails pointed like claws. Disjointed hands bigger than my entire body smash into the sea around me, sending a spire of frothing waves that forces me back.
"I just wanted you to be happy!" Rawi repeats in the ghost's voice, but now his voice echoes through the storm, a thousand Rawis speaking at once. "Like me!"
Narrator: “You literally
weren’t happy, though! You literally climbed a mountain to go and die!”
There are a thousand dimensions where Rawi is alive and well, and I'm drowning in the only one where he isn't.
Maybe this is why our people fear and revere Hoopa so much. There's a strange sort of magic in this power, the power of a wish, the power of belief. If I believe wholly that story that Hoopa tells me, that Rawi is alive, that none of this ever happened, then for me it's no different than if I whispered my wish into this magic bottle and a genie made it into my reality.
I’ll admit that I wouldn’t have expected that one since I could’ve sworn the Prison Bottle event was a
Gen 6 thing, but…
And the price for that wish would be simple—I would just have to close my eyes and ears to reality for the rest of my life, to allow the weight of that lie to drag me down with him.
I almost choke on the sea the first time, almost let it fill my lungs and drag me down, and then Pounamu is surging up beneath me, serpentine neck lifting me into the air and out of the waters. I clutch the lapras, dripping, and the two of us stare at the unbound monstrosity ahead.
Narrator: “Pounamu, you see it too right? Please tell me that that’s not all in my head too, right?”
"Stay with me. Where would I want to be except here, with you?"
It's not him. That was never him.
My retort bursts back at him. "I made you say that. You aren't real." It starts out calm, and then saying the words aloud makes the truth sink in, the same way my heart sinks in my chest. "This isn't what you would be saying. The real you wouldn't give a damn about making sure I knew what you were thinking because the one time it mattered, the real you didn't."
I mean, it’s technically not
wrong, even if I suspect this is a rather uncharitable framing that the narrator would likely regret going with when he’s a bit more sober-minded.
I look at the bottle one last time, its cork bobbing harmlessly in the sea. I want to close my eyes, but I force myself to look at it, even as Pounamu pulls us away. "You aren't Rawi. You're just all the things I wish I could've told him. All the things I wish he would've told me."
There's no way I could've heard him across the wind, but there's still tangible pain in his voice, that cuts like a knife, when he whispers: "Oh. Okay then."
Like,
yeah, it needed to happen, but it still
hurt to read.
Three things happen in rapid succession.
The storm crumples into itself, leaving only silence.
The twisted bottle sinks into the sea.
Rawi vanishes from my sight.
Wait, wait, wait. So there
was an actual Prison Bottle all this time? .-.
I return home. I shower the sea away. I dry myself off. I go to sleep, I wake up, I work. I put the bottle and the ghost and my wish behind me. Rawi does not speak to me anymore, but I see glimpses of him out of the corner of my eye, when I don't expect it.
For six months I can't bring myself back to the cove. There's nothing there for me.
I mean, there’s Pounamu, at least? That counts as something, doesn’t it? ^^;
It's almost winter when I wake up in the middle of the night, struck by certainty. I put on my hiking boots and shrug my jacket over my shoulders, open the door to the cold.
The path before me is familiar. The dirt crunches a little beneath my feet from the frost. I tuck my hands into my pockets and lower my head against the wind until I reach the cove.
And you are going out here at this time of year
why?
It's cloudy; the night is dark because of it. My flashlight casts strange shadows against the sand, makes gaping caverns and yawning pits out of dunes that are six inches tall. There's a familiar game of shadow puppets here, and just remembering it fills me with warmth.
Rawi was right, as usual. As soon as I'm back, I wish I'd gone a long time ago. The beach is washed smooth, all signs of the storm erased by time.
The waves lap around my ankles as I wade into the sea.
"Pounamu?"
Um… narrator? If you ghosted Pounamu for
six months, are you sure that he didn’t just conclude that you stepped out in front of a bus and just swam off without you?
My call is swallowed by the gentle swell of the waves. I hear it echo and taper away, and then fade off into silence.
I wade further and further into the water, until it's nearly up to my waist. "Pounamu!"
The lapras does not come. Of course he doesn't. The ocean is a large place, and I left him alone. There's a bitter moment where I realize that he's just as likely to find his missing family as I am.
I mean, he’s technically
more likely given that his family at least
has a chance of being alive while yours is just flatly dead, narrator.
This is our cove. It looks the same all over but it isn't; it's my childhood home and now my greatest sorrow. No other place in the world will hurt to look at in the same way that this one does. I will be the youngest for the rest of my life.
I sit with one leg draped off of the rock, toes dipping into the salty water, and time flows. When I'm finally aware of it again, the tide has risen up to my knees. I pull out our flask, half-expecting Rawi to tell me off for that too, but there's only the sea in the sound around me.
I suppose that’s a sign that our narrator has reached the ‘Acceptance’ stage of depression there.
Rawi and I turned two happy children into one morose adult sitting on the edge of the ocean, drinking to keep warm. I didn't bring any equipment to spend the night out here. I didn't prepare for this. I didn't prepare for any of this. But I can sit here and look at the night sky and hear the waves beating against the rocks, and I can finally do the things I should've done long ago.
"Sorry. I know you cared."
Five words. I decide on that. Five words. Boil down everything I wish I'd said to a handful of secrets, because time is passing and it is infinite, but ultimately for us it is short.
For a second, I thought “Rawi” returned there, but yeah, that makes sense there.
The words I shouted to Hoopa still haunt me, even if they were never heard by anyone else except me and Pounamu and the waves. Because they were wrong, because I was wrong. Of course Rawi cared. That was who he was. Caring was what he did best.
Yeah, I figured that the narrator would wind up regretting shouting that “you didn’t give a damn” line earlier.
He kept chattering to me for those five days that I spent curled up in bed; I heard him talking to me every day thereafter; sometimes, I can almost hear his whispers now. He's watching me expectantly when I pack his hiking equipment into the attic, he's humming along when his favorite song plays on the radio, he's on the beach as a stranger walks by with his lopsided gait. I see him everywhere except where I want him to be.
I mean, at least you’re not actively hallucinating him being alongside you right now, so… progress? ^^;
On the zero day, it was easy enough to tell the world one thing and mean another, to commit the same travesty that Rawi had to all of us, to say I was okay and all along know I never meant it. I could wear my funeral lei and say hello-goodbye-iloveyou. I could keep my chin up and my feelings bottled up inside. I could make a speech about trite things that we had all heard before, gloss over his dark undertow and describe him as warm waves in the cove. And I did.
We kept secrets from each other. I never told him how lonely I was, how those five days I spent curled up in bed weren't the only five days in my life that I felt the same way he did, how I'd been pushed to the brink and stared into the abyss in the exact same way he did. I never told him because I didn't want him to think I was less.
Yeeeeeeah, I take it that their parents really
did die sometime in the past, since it would explain a
lot about how much these two chronically struggled with depression.
I could've told him, but instead, I didn't. And by the time I realized it all, there was no making him any more solid than the ghost across my shoulder. Maybe he hadn't written a note because he'd seen how much I hated stories that ended sadly. Maybe there'd been one and it had been lost to the elements.
I mean, yeah. That did feel like one of those things that felt like “grief-induced fantasizing” there.
But it wasn't just the one message. It had been every message, every conversation I wished we'd had, every sunrise we hadn't seen, every time there was advice I was supposed to tell him and I'd put it off for later, because I'd always assumed there'd be a later.
It had been easy to survey the storm-torn sands and tell myself I'd be exactly who I was going to be, that I'd been okay and okay was a state I'd always known. But instead of patching up, I bottled up. I didn't rebuild anything. I just swept all the broken bits away and hoped I would forget to replace them. And when I kept sifting through the wreckage and found more and more broken bits, and I put them all away, far away, where I'd never accidentally look at them and cut myself on reality.
Which I take have been keeping you very,
very busy for the past six months, since… yeah. .-.
But when I looked at the pile again and the broken bits still hurt to touch, I corked them in a bottle, and when that wasn't enough, I built the bottle bigger and bigger until it could imprison the whole world that I needed it to; and when that wasn't enough I threw it into the ocean, made a wish on a legend and hoped that it would all work out.
It wasn't until the sea washed an unrecognizable mess of cracks and seaweed and decay back that I realized my mistake: the person left on the beach wasn't me because my heart was scrawled in that bottle.
Um… narrator,
where are you going with this right now? .-.
He felt so hollow when he was dragging me on hikes and to Pounamu and into the sea because it wasn't Rawi, not really. I remembered what I wanted to see of him—a young kid with a heart of gold and eyes full of fire, but there was more to them than that. He was deep like a cove and stormed like rough waters; he had ups and downs and everything in between; when people asked me if we were close I couldn't help but think not close enough because we really weren't, not if I couldn't see the path he was following me down from the start.
Yeah, figures given that “Rawi” was never really there all that time.
"It hurts you, doesn't it?" I imagine him asking. There was always care in his voice, but I can hear the way that it cracks a little more in the middle, edges flaking off the ends of his words. "Why keep revisiting this place? Why open it up again?"
I know the answer to the same question I asked myself every day for months, what I wished we'd been able to tell each other when we needed it most.
Letting the broken bits tumble back out of the bottle is the hardest part, but it's how I learned to fuel myself. When the sky falls and the storm grows and I want to go back to a greyscale life, I open up my chest to that burning hole where my heart beats and I remember. There is a relic there, ancient and rotting, a twisted mass held together by tendrils of glass. It smells of salt and loves the sea, and it will always be mine to bear. Some days, it is my anchor against the storm; some days, it drags me down with it.
I… think that I have something in my eye right now.
He doesn't say anything else. My old brain wouldn't have let him be okay with this, because for my fictional Rawi to acknowledge my pain, I would have to acknowledge his.
And the real Rawi, who would never dream of questioning someone for baring their heart to him like that, would've told me about this bottled fire long ago, because his short and vibrant and painful life was almost certainly fueled wholly by the burden that no one else should hurt the same way he did. That was the danger when he stopped living for himself, until eventually the sea consumed him and his bottle and his heart.
Yeeeeeeah, I can already tell that it will take a long time, if ever, for the narrator to come to terms with the fact that Rawi was in deep personal pain and he
just didn’t see it until it was too late.
"Hello. Goodbye. I love you."
Alola. I missed him. I miss him. And, when I least expect it, I think I always will.
Oh, so you
did go with ‘Alola’ for this story. Duly noted.
He is gone and I am here, but I will always be a person shaped by the mold that Rawi used to be.
The waves shift. The water churns. There is a triumphant cry, and Pounamu emerges from the sea.
Oh hey, so there’s
some happy note for this story to end on.
