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Story Overview New

Slayerofthewind

Chaos Gremlin
Pronouns
she/her
Start Notes:
Hello, hello!! I am *very* new to this forum and excited to be here! This intro/overview first post in the thread will be edited heavily as I start understand the layout and such better. I aspire to have a pretty overview post like every other fic on this forum has. You guys have set the bar high, and I will eventually clean this up to hopefully look a fraction as good as some of your's do!

Update: OOOOO I finished some art for the fic, and now my intro post begins to get pretty!!! WOOOO!!! I have also added art to a few spots in the chapters, and I'll probably continue to update with art as I finish more. I have a lot more art in the works, so hopefully you guys enjoy the visual accompaniments! I am having to physically stop myself from making this whole fic into a comic, because that would eat just way too much time, but I'll be making a few mini-comics as we go!

My fic is cross-posted on AO3 here, so you might have seen it there, but is new to the forums! I'm working on porting over the rest of the existing chapters to this site.

I'm working on finishing up some art for the fic, so that will be coming soon as well!

Feel free to share any and all thoughts you have on the fic! I'm a person that will unashamedly admit I LOVE getting comments on fics and hear reactions, thoughts, feedback, things you enjoyed, etc lol. They never fail to make my day!

Hope you enjoy!!

Additional note: All art for the fic is done by myself unless specified otherwise!



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International Celebrity Ruins Everything

Legends: Z-A, Pokemon XY

Pairings: Urbain/Serena

Content warning: Strong language (putting this to be safe!)

(I know tags like AO3 aren't really a thing here, but I'm just gonna put the tags here anyways)

Tags:

Pokemon Legends: Z-A Spoilers, one of the 10 views Urbain’s video got was Serena, when you’re terrible at marketing but also excellent because your video found the most famous person in the region, Urbain is a Precious Gullible Idiot, Urbain is Effortlessly Charming, Urbain’s 100000 Blood Money Video, Serena is not a fan of the new construction-chic Lumiose look, Serena has that Clark Kent disguise but it WORKS, Serena has excellent fashion taste and bad taste in everything else, Serena is a fancy mess, Serena and Urbain are 18, AZ is like Serena’s grandpa, Trigger Happy AZ’s Floette, Serena is the Pokemon Y Protagonist, Pokemon Y Version, previous game protag is the new game protag, Serena is Seika | Harmony, Pokemon Have Abilities, Ghost-type Pokemon, Dark-type Pokemon, Sableye is a Menace, Crack Treated Seriously, AU - alternate universe, AU - Canon Divergence, the most chaotic attempt at revising the PLZA plot, featuring me adding mechanics and story beats that should have been there, and the power plant, let me go into the power plant you coward, Social Media, Angst, Hurt/Comfort, Humor, Fluff, Found Family

Summary:

At 13, Serena became the Kalos League Champion, rocketing her into stardom, fame, and glory. Unable to settle down permanently in Kalos just yet, possibly (probably) due to trauma, Serena heads to Hoenn under the guise of studying the origins of Mega Evolution, only briefly returning to Kalos to handle Champion affairs when absolutely needed.

Five years later, after seeing a very odd promotional video for Hotel Z, Serena is stunned. AZ, the 3,000-year-old giant homeless senile war criminal who interrupted her Champion parade, owned a HOTEL?! Serena decides that a stay in Lumiose is in order immediately. What was supposed to be a drop-in visit quickly spirals into another massive undertaking, featuring a wide array of new and fun colorful megalomaniacs, and training a brand new team.

At least this time, it was just the fate of Lumiose on the line, not the destruction of the entire world and every life form on it. Small victories.



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Chapter 1: A More Beautiful Lumiose New

Slayerofthewind

Chaos Gremlin
Pronouns
she/her
A More Beautiful Lumiose

Chapter 1



“...No order is too tall when you have our esteemed owner at the helm! Choose Hotel Z for your next stay in Lumiose!”

“Hotel Z is the best hotel in Lumiose! No order is too
tall when…”

“Hotel Z is the…”

“Hotel Z…”


Serena let the video that had randomly popped up on her feed loop continuously, unable to tear her eyes away as she failed to comprehend what she was seeing. After about the 15th time the video had played, Serena scrambled to check the profile of the poster, nearly dropping her Rotom Phone in the process, and accidentally knocking her coffee cup off the counter. It shattered on the ground, hot coffee and porcelain spattering everywhere, but Serena didn’t even glance at it.

The username was “hotelzlumiose” with the display name “Hotel Z - Lumiose City.” The account had several other short promotional videos, all only racking up single digit views, though one notably stood out for having a whopping 25 views. However, now that Serena thought about it, that was the video she’d been letting play over and over again.

She promptly watched every other video on the account, eyes glued to the screen. Each video featured an admittedly very cute boy who had light blonde hair with red tips, some shots of the supposed Hotel Z, and a few Pokemon, usually some combination of a Chikorita, Totodile, and Tepig. But sometimes, and most importantly, the videos displayed the toweringly tall owner of said hotel and his Floette.

Serena had to pinch herself to make sure she wasn’t seeing things.

There was no WAY!

The hotel owner, who looked very dapper and put together, dressed nicely in a button-up vest, slacks, and a bowtie with his hair cut, tamed, and arranged in a long braid… was AZ!!

AZ, the 3,000-year-old giant homeless senile war criminal who interrupted her Champion parade, owned a HOTEL?!

The AZ Serena had to DRAG into a clothing store to buy bespoke clothes for while he refused to accept anything “too nice” the entire outing and swore he’d never wear a suit.

The AZ who wouldn’t even WALK into a hair salon with Serena and vowed he’d never touch his hair.

The AZ who REFUSED to let Serena purchase him an apartment because he didn’t want to settle down, claiming he was a life long wanderer.

The AZ who, no matter how much Serena begged him before her departure, wouldn’t get a Holo Caster to keep in touch with her, stubbornly declaring that technology was out of his depth.

THAT AZ?!

OWNED A HOTEL?!

Serena had to see this for herself in person. Because there was NO WAY she’d accept that this was real until she saw it with her own two eyes.

She’d stayed away from Kalos, as far away from Lumiose as possible in the last five years, but this was more than worth breaking her Lumiose-ban for. Serena immediately bought a ticket to Kalos for the next day.

Now, all she needed was a disguise.



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Urbain’s Rotom Phone popped out of his pocket and floated in front of him. “Okay, ready to record! Now all we need is a tourist fresh off the train. Hope you three are ready for the spotlight again!”

Chikorita, Totodile, and Tepig all made noises of agreement. They were more than ready for the spotlight! They were born ready! They wanted to be stars as much as the actual stars hung in the sky above!

“If we’re gonna protect Lumiose, we’ll need a bigger team!” Urbain resolved. “So let’s keep spreading the word about how great Hotel Z is. And once we get a guest who has what it takes, we’ll recruit ‘em to the cause! Now we need someone with a real “I’m a tourist” look.” Urbain watched the crowd of people exit the station, and that’s when he caught sight of her.

There was a girl who appeared to be about his age. She doesn’t look exactly like a tourist per se, but she didn’t fit in at all with the people around her. She stood out, and caught Urbain’s eye immediately. She was practically sparkling with how put together she was. She wore a long open tan trench coat, a short red plaid dress, knee-high heeled brown boots, and a maroon felt hat. Her long, honey-colored hair was tied in pigtails and her blue-gray eyes were tucked behind a pair of slightly cat-eyed rounded tortoiseshell glasses.

Something tickled in the back of Urbain’s head that she didn’t look quite right with glasses, but he waved it off. She was very fashionable and beautiful, sure, but there’s also something magnetic about her that’s drawing him in, and if Urbain thought that, the camera would think that too!

Plus, she did have a rather huge old-fashioned travel bag that did seem very touristy on its own. However, the overly large leather bag didn’t even look out of place at her side. She somehow made it work perfectly with her look.

“Hey, you there!” Urbain called out to her. Attention successfully caught, she looked a bit startled at being singled out. Oops! He shouldn't have been so loud. Getting randomly screamed at in a crowd was bound to make anyone uncomfortable. Urbain walked over to her. “Just pulled into the Gare de Lumiose, am I right?” he asked lightly, with an easy smile, trying to compensate for the shock he’d given her. Urbain really wanted her to be in the promo video, so hopefully he hadn’t scared her off.

It seemed like his worries had been unfounded because her alertness melted away and her eyes widened slightly in recognition. “Oh, hey! You’re the guy from the video!” she identified.

“Y-you saw the video?!” Despite the multitude of videos Urbain had put out, being recognized on the street like this had never happened before! He’d always wished it would happen though. It would be proof that his PR ads were working. But it finally happened! And the fact that this really pretty girl was the one who did?!

“Chika?! Chik, chik!!” Chikorita disbelievingly poked Totodile and Tepig, who were equally as shocked.

“Te, pig.” Tepig muttered, overwhelmed. They were finally reaching the heights of fame they knew they were destined for! All of their secret midnight practices the three of them had while Urbain was sleeping were worth it!

The girl smiled radiantly. “Yeah! I came back to Lumiose just to stay in Hotel Z because of it.”

Urbain’s heart fluttered, and he couldn’t help himself from impulsive shouting, “REALLY?!” This was one of the best days of Urbain’s life. It wasn’t even that she was planning a trip to Lumiose and happened to see his advertisement. No. She came to Lumiose JUST to stay in Hotel Z because of HIS video!

“TOTODILE?!” Totodile screeched, eyes practically popping out of his head.

“Yes, really,” Serena confirmed playfully, very much enjoying how excited he and his Pokemon were. His joy was contagious. “I couldn’t find anywhere to book online, so I figured I’d just show up. Hopefully you’re not booked…?”

“NO!” he frantically exclaimed, reaching out his hands like he was ready to stop her as if she was about to run away. Urbain coughed to try to cover his blunder and returned his hands to his sides, attempting to somewhat look more casual. “No. We have plenty of room!!” He had to shoot down the idea that she should look anywhere else to stay but Hotel Z! “Hey, actually, I was just about to film another promo video for the hotel, do you want to be in it?”

“Sure, sounds like fun!” Serena loved being on camera, and she was completely okay with endorsing AZ’s hotel de war crimes. The mental image of the towering AZ bumbling about with a flood of guests and struggling to do customer service was too good to pass up on. Serena would absolutely slap her face on whatever ad Hotel Z was putting out.

Score! Urbain really lucked out! “I need you to look into the camera and say, “Hotel Z’s the best stay in Lumiose!” Easy, right?”

Serena tilted her head, confused. “Oh, that’s it? You don’t want to spice up the promo with camera angles and effects? Sparkle cannons are always a good addition. If you don’t have that on hand, Dazzling Gleam works well instead.”

Serena might not be a director, but she’d made enough Trainer PR videos and been in countless brands advertisements and photoshoots to know a little bit about filmmaking and marketing. Serena being in the Hotel Z ad would do wonders on its own, but the video would reach even greater heights with a higher production value to snag viewer attention.

Overwhelmed customer service AZ was on the line here!

“Nah,” he waved off her suggestion, “simple is always better! We’re going for authenticity.”

“Alright, if you say so,” Serena agreed, albeit skeptically. “Though, I really do think a Dazzling Gleam behind me would really improve the shot.” If somehow the video didn’t go viral, Serena would step in and find another way to make her very important new dream a reality.

Urbain delightedly laughed, enjoying her clear enthusiasm for his video. “I love the passion, but Hotel Z is good enough to bring in customers without all the bells and whistles. Okay, lights, camera…”

Loud music unexpectedly blasted from the nearby billboard, dominating the entire intersection and train station courtyard. The volume ensured that no one would be ignoring it.

Urbain grimaced, energy deflating, and tucked his Rotom Phone away. “Ah, shoot. We can’t film with that ad blaring in the background!”

On screen, the video opened on a middle aged woman with bleached blonde hair in a clean cut work-dress. “Welcome to Lumiose City, where people and Pokemon flourish together. My name is Jett, and I’m the CEO of Quasartico Inc. Pokemon are mysterious…”

Serena was overwhelmed by the unpleasant jarring interruption. “I can’t believe they’re allowing ads to be playing that loud in the streets! It’s ruining the city's atmosphere. What is the new mayor thinking?!”

“I’m guessing you’ve been to Lumiose before, huh?” Urbain observed.

“Oh, yes,” Serena confirmed, trolling through the multitude of memories she had in Lumiose, the good and the bad. “Many, many times. I lived here briefly about 5 years ago.”

Urbain scrunched his eyes in a half-wince, half-smile. “Yeah, the city has changed a lot since then, especially with this new urban redevelopment plan Quasartico is rolling out. The mayor is really on board with it.”

“Ugh, that mayor,” Serena groaned. “I bet Clemont is more than happy to let the mayor run amok. He’s probably loving all the technology updates.”

Tuning back into the ad, Jett continued, “…that we’ve begun setting up wild zones where they can live comfortably alongside us…”

Serena stared aghast at the images on screen. “Arceus, please don’t tell me that company is wrecking any of the historic architecture to make their little habitats?!” Lumiose’s aesthetics and architecture were sacred!!

“Well…” Urbain weakly trailed off, not wanting to finish, knowing she’d hate the answer.

“That’s not a no,” she noted briskly, clicking her tongue. “The damned mayor is probably revoking the historical status of the structures just to let them do whatever they want! Oh, Lumiose, what have they done to you?” Serena wallowed in grief at the fate of this beautiful city.

Urbain hadn’t expected her to be so opinionated on it. She really didn’t seem like the type to be anti-Pokemon. “You’re really against the wild zones. Do you not like Pokemon in the city?”

“Pokemon in the city is wonderful, they should be allowed to live wherever they like, here or otherwise,” Serena huffed. “Just don’t let companies purposefully destroy history to make that happen! It’s like replacing all of the mirrors in Parfum Palace’s Hall of Mirrors with TVs because mirrors are outdated. This is blasphemous!!” Serena will admit that she had some destruction-related trauma, but regardless, the integrity of Lumiose’s old architecture should be preserved!

Urbain nodded, understanding her argument now. What a relief! She wasn’t anti-Pokemon, that would have been terrible! “Ah, I see what you mean. I agree with you on that one, actually.”

“They better not have touched any of the fountains or obelisks!” Serena protested fiercely, turning her attention back to the stupidly loud video to pour over the visuals and scan for crimes against history.

With a flourish, Jett announced, “We’ve now employed our patented holo-tech in all corners of Lumiose so our interactive guides can teach you more about your surroundings…”

‘Holo-tech… Wait, did they buy out Lysandre Labs’ patents? They were allowed to do that?!’
Serena faltered, her disgust over design choices quickly fading into extreme suspicion of Quasartico. Her eyes widened, horrified. ‘Oh no, their technology is already everywhere in the city!’

As if the woman had prepared her next words specifically for Serena, Jett declared, “A city even more beautiful than before awaits all of us.”

Serena felt like this CEO– Jett was looking directly into her soul, her eyes now filled with a heavy presence far greater than any pre-recorded billboard ad should have been able to convey.

‘Not even 10 minutes back in Lumiose and there’s another charismatic CEO trying to change the world to make it more beautiful with a holo-tech agenda.’ Serena had seen this play out before. It haunted her every night. It was why she couldn’t find it in her to stay in Kalos.

Serena wished she wouldn’t get involved, but she knew that she couldn’t just leave Kalos to suffer a horrible fate again. No way. She refused. Serena didn’t want to keep playing the hero, but she’d be damned if she didn’t take action when she knew she could do something.

Especially since this only happened in the first place because Serena left Kalos and fled to Hoenn. Serena had been ignoring her league duties, just doing the bare minimum to keep her title, enjoying the fame without the responsibility, and had purposefully abstained from being involved with Kalos’ affairs. Had Serena been more watchful and present, she could have stopped this mess before it was approved.

Before it was everywhere in the city.

This happened because of her negligence. Because Serena couldn’t cope with what had happened to her and had to leave to get away from all the reminders, especially in Lumiose. Because Serena couldn’t get over having the fate of the world rest on her shoulders. Couldn’t rationalize the many, many attempts on her and her Pokemon’s lives at the hands of Team Flare.

With knowing that if she failed or made one small mistake, all life on the planet would end.

And it would have been her fault.

Because she wasn’t able to deal with seeing a man and his Pokemon crushed to death. Because of her.

Serena had only been 13. She shouldn’t have been expected to cope or be responsible for any of that! She was just a child! The adults in the region should have stepped up and taken care of it like they were supposed to!

Diantha, Sycamore, the gym leaders, everyone! They all failed her.

No. Serena refused to be just another oblivious Champion who thrust their responsibility onto some unsuspecting, hopeful child.

Serena would deal with her mess herself.

It was time to step up and start taking her role as Champion seriously.

Wrapping up the advertisement, Jett politely concluded, “We hope you’ll bear that in mind and pardon our construction work.” The screen faded into Quasartico’s logo. “The Mega Evolution of Lumiose City is coming, brought to you by Quasartico Inc.”

‘Oh, I’m bearing that
beautiful future you want in mind greatly, Quasartico. Message received loud and clear, don’t worry.’ Serena narrowed her eyes, glaring daggers at the billboard and crossing her arms. ‘And no, you’re not excused for the construction work. It’s tacky. Do better.’

Serena had immediately noticed the scaffolding as soon as she left the train station doors. Well, that and the newly retrofitted anti-homeless benches. The scaffolding was just that jarring of a contrast from the buildings that immediately stood out! It was garish, ugly, and didn’t match the Lumiose aesthetic at all!! It got a big no, no, no, NO from her!

“I like how that CEO thinks,” Urbain commended. “Even if her ad did keep us from filming. This city and its Pokemon are a wonder. To know ‘em is to love ‘em! Anyone who visits gets it.”

Calem’s interactions with Lysandre unwillingly flashed in Serena’s mind. “Lumiose and its Pokemon are special, there’s no doubt about that. I won’t let anyone,” she hardened her stare at the billboard, “try to ruin that.”

Not really clocking her ire and only noting her intensity, Urbain tucked his hands behind his head and grinned. “See? You get it! And speaking of people who visit Lumiose, the new promo video is gonna convince them to give Hotel Z a shot! You’re proof it’s already working!”

“Is Hotel Z struggling to get guests?” Serena asked.

“Er, yeah,” Urbain reluctantly admitted, “That’s why I’m doing all the promo videos, you know? Gotta help get new guests somehow.”

Serena raised an eyebrow. “Well, you don’t have a website or a place to book online. You’re not exactly making it easy for people to reach out to you to book a room,” she bluntly evaluated. She had thought the lack of online presence was an attempt to look exclusive, not because of incompetence.

Urbain’s energy shrunk. It was a harsh but very fair point. “I’ve tried to get the hotel owner to agree to a website, but he says he won’t do it. Something about being out of touch with new technology,” he defended.

Serena sighed. “Of course he did,” she muttered under her breath.

“What was that?”

“Nothing,” Serena dismissed. “Anyways, just put me in whatever PR video you wanted to make, and people will flock to the hotel.” It looked like she’d have to forcefully make AZ finally adapt to modern technology.

“Wow, that’s some confidence you have there!” Urbain cheered. “I like it! It’s just the energy we need for the video!”

Serena blinked, genuinely perplexed. “…Do you really not recognize me?” Yes, she was wearing a disguise – a trenchcoat and fake glasses – but it was intended for people to not notice her at a glance. It was a tactic to avoid being crowded. Serena had figured it wouldn’t work for people that spent more than a few minutes looking at her.

“No…? Should I…?” Urbain hesitated. “I mean, you’re pretty enough to be famous, yeah, but I don’t recognize you at all.”

Ironically, from behind Urbain, the billboard that had so graciously delivered the previous message from hell flickered into an ad featuring Serena herself advertising a new fashion line.

Serena glanced up and down between the billboard and Urbain in disbelief. “Wow, okay. This disguise really is working.”

“Oh, are you actually famous then and trying to go incognito?” Urbain wondered.

Serena now found the whole unknown identity thing very amusing. “Yes, something like that.”

“Got it!” Urbain raised a finger in front of lips to make a “shh” gesture like he was keeping a secret. “We’ll be super inconspicuous then. Very low key.” He bowed, one arm across his middle, and the other arm out to the side. “Only the most secret of escorts to the hotel for the lady in disguise.” He winked at her.

Serena was momentarily stunned. ‘He’s kind of an idiot, but why is this actually so charming?! That should have been cringy, so why is this working for him?!’

Urbain smirked at her unbalanced state. “Let me take your bag… Hold up – where’d your bag go?” He looked around, wondering if she’d dropped it somewhere.

“Huh? I could have sworn…” Serena cursed that she’d been momentarily distracted because of a suave line. She was better than that! She still had her go-to pink tote with all her Pokemon, but her luggage bag was gone.

‘Of course, now I’ve been mugged. Just my luck. Welcome back to Kalos, Serena! Have some evil agendas you get to deal with, an ugly scaffolding-chic Lumiose, and a side of robbery.’ Serena groaned disparagingly at her fate. ‘This is really not my day.’

“Hey!” Urbain shouted. “That Pancham’s got it!” He pointed to the Pokemon in question.

A Pancham danced merrily, bouncing from foot to foot, Serena’s bag hoisted over one of her shoulders, flaunting her grab in their faces. She stuck her tongue out at them and pulled down on her lower eyelid. Pancham blew a raspberry, the leaf in her mouth whistling so the noise sounded like a mocking “toot,” and her taunting expression all but said, “Hahah! Suckers! You’re all idiots!”

“The nerve!!” Serena stomped her foot in frustration, hands fisted by her side.

“Did you hire a Pokemon courier service or something?” Urbain obliviously asked.

Serena looked up to the sky as if the clouds above would give her the grace to handle this situation with. “Arceus, you’re lucky you’re pretty. No!” she exclaimed, meeting his eyes. “What about that looked like it was planned?!”

Urbain blushed. “You think I’m pretty?” he said bashfully.

Serena deadpanned, “Is that really what you took away from what I just said?” She pinched her nose, exasperated. “That Pancham stole my bag!”

Urbain, finally clued into what was happening, leaned back, bringing his hands up in front of him in shock. “Wait… so your bag got bagnapped?!” He grimaced, looking away and scratching the back of his head, regretful. “I shouldn’t have bugged you with my video stuff… My bad! Come on, I’ll help you get your bag back!” Urbain took off running after the Pancham. Great! He messed up again! Way to be smooth, Urbain! He had to make it right by returning her bag.

“Thank you!” Serena exclaimed, happy that he was getting with the program. Serena easily matched his pace, running beside him.

“Quick! After that Pokemon!” Urbain commanded his three Pokemon. They scampered ahead. The Pancham made an evasive move to cut down a corner street. “It went into that alley there! Man, that thing can hustle!”

“I see it!” Serena started sprinting, outpacing Urbain, heels clacking rapidly along the cobblestones.

“You know, you run really fast despite wearing heeled boots!” Urbain marveled, impressed.

“Please,” Serena scoffed, “as if I would stumble while wearing designer shoes!” she screamed, outraged at the thought.

Urbain muffled a laugh. It was cute that being frustrated made her snarky and less composed. “It went left just before that dead end!”

The Pancham stopped. Serena and Urbain paused their chase and watched from around the corner as the Pancham reunited with and showed off his haul to two Trainers.

“I guess this wasn’t just a wild Pokemon randomly messing with you. That bag-napping Pancham must’ve been with those two.” Urbain turned to Serena. “Listen– oh, hey, actually what’s your name?” Urbain glanced away, embarrassed. “Sorry, I should have asked you earlier. Just kinda got caught up in everything.”

“It’s fine, I didn’t exactly ask for your name either. I’m Serena, and you are?” She introduced herself, morbidly wondering when exactly he would clue into realizing who she was.

“Serena? Got it. That’s a nice name! I’m Urbain.” He gave her a close-eyed beaming smile Serena would have been dazzled by if not for her fixating on the sheer lack of recognition even after having her name. Urbain was clearly still completely clueless. Was her disguise just that good or was he just the oblivious-earnest type? Serena figured it was probably both. “And don’t you worry – I’ve got your back here!”

“Even a backpacker like me wouldn’t be caught dead with a bag this tacky!” one of the Trainers with Pancham stressed, repulsed by the bag.

“Maybe it was trying to clean up this eyesore,” the other Trainer suggested, trying to reason why Pancham stole such an ugly bag. “Let’s bring it to the cops! Bet they’ll pat us on the back.”

“YOU TAKE THAT BACK!” Serena screeched, scandalized. Her sheer indignation at the slight dominating any need to be sneaky. She stormed over to the two Trainers. “It is vintage Boutique Couture! But I guess a backpacker like you wouldn’t appreciate high fashion.”

“So what if it costs a lot!” the backpacker fumed. “It’s still ugly!!”

Affronted, Serena was ready to charge her. “WHY YOU–”

“No need to take it to the police guys,” Urbain quickly interrupted, trying to defuse the situation but very amused by Serena’s sudden personality shift. Her very put-together air crumbled when she got upset! “If you haven’t gotten the memo yet, she’s the owner of the bag, just give it back to her.”

Serena backed off with a huff and crossed her arms. No, she was not pouting.

“HEY!! You’re Urbain!!” the backpacker shouted, surprised, but not exactly happy to see him.

Serena was baffled that someone recognized Urbain like he was a big deal when she was standing right there next to him completely anonymous! This disguise was really putting in work! The glasses were definitely worth the exorbitant price tag!

“I… can’t say I know you. Did you see one of the ads I filmed, maybe?” Urbain asked wishfully.

Serena thought it was precious that he sounded so hopeful that his video ads might have been circulating enough for two people to have recognized him today.

The backpacker shook her head, offended and shocked Urbain didn’t remember her. “It’s me, Andi! From the Z-A Royale! How could you forget already?!”

“Yeah, I’m Andre!” the other Trainer jumped in. “We faced off just last night!”

Urbain put his hands on his hips and looked down his nose at them, haughty. “Oh, Trainers from last night? Sorry, not ringing a bell. Must not have been much of a challenge.” No, he was definitely NOT being extra rude because they brutally crushed his dreams of being recognized twice today from his hotel videos!

Andi looked humiliated. “That stings. But I guess… fair.”

Serena, positively gleeful that Urbain was joining her dissing these two, was encouraged to continue poking at them. “No eye for fashion and weak trainers? Please, what do you even have going for you at that point?” She flipped her hair over her shoulder, smirking at them like they were nothing more than peasants huddled outside her castle.

Infuriated, Andre announced, “Listen up! We’ll return your bag – if you battle us right now!”

Urbain shook his head, confused. “That makes no sense. If you want a rematch, all you have to do is wait till nightfall.”

“SHUT UP!” Andre spat. “Pancham’s itching for another shot at you. That’s why it snagged the bag! Uh, probably!”

“It’s nice of you to consider what Pancham wants.” Serena hated that Urbain said that earnestly. Really, Urbain was lucky he was pretty because he was too understanding that it circled right back around to being gullible! “But the two of you against me? That’s unfair!”

Serena was more than ready to throw down. If he thought it was unfair now, she was about to swing that wildly in the other direction.

Urbain turned to Serena, looking a little regretful. “Listen. How about I guide you through this mess? I’m just a helpful kind of guy, you see. Your bag got stolen, right? So what’s your next step here?”

Serena clenched her manicured hand into a fist in front of her. “Crush them with no mercy! They will pay for their crimes against fashion.”

“Er, yeah,” Urbain faltered, though he was internally laughing at her extreme ferocity. “Love to see your priorities are in order. And you’ve got three Pokemon right here ready to help!”

“Whatever, just hurry up or it’ll be night anyway!” Andi stated impatiently.

“Hear that? They’re down!” Urbain gestured to his own three Pokemon. “Now choose which Pokemon you’ll battle with!”

“Thanks for the offer, but there’s no need.” Serena grinned ferally. “I am a Trainer, and I’ve got a full team with me.” These fools were in for a shock!

“Great! You’ll be able to handle this no problem!” Urbain cheered.

“How much longer are you gonna drag your feet?” Andi barked.

Serena clicked her tongue. “Oh, I’m more than ready to battle.” She patted the imaginary creases on her outfit. Serena reached into her tote and pulled out a Pokeball.

“All that waiting drained my momentum. Time to get back into gear! No way I’m gonna get beat by a prissy fashionista like you! You’re going down!” Andi taunted. “Pancham gave us a shot at revenge, and we won’t miss!”

“I respect that spirit. But you’re gonna have egg on your face for real if you lose after that declaration!” Urbain shook his head, skeptical.

“Hey!” Andre shouted, feeling ignored. “Focus up, Urbain – you’re dealing with me!”

“Right,” Urbain rolled his eyes, putting his hands on his hips. “I’m sure you got muuuuch stronger in the day since I beat you!” His abundant sarcasm indicated just how much of a threat Urbain thought this Trainer was.

Serena cackled. Urbain might be a gullible idiot, but he was a cute gullible idiot with an edge. She was very much a fan of the unexpected sass!

“Go, Pancham!” The backpacker’s cry caused Serena to refocus on her own battle.

Pancham was brimming with confidence and a self-satisfied glee that the situation she’d arranged for was bearing exactly the fruit she wanted! Revenge!!!

“Sensei, show them who's in charge!” Serena sent out her beloved partner who’d been with her since day one. There was no one better to thoroughly trounce this Pancham than her perfect grossly overpowered Greninja.

Sensei emerged from his Pokeball. Aided by the sunset’s back lighting, the Greninja’s looming shadow stretched far away from his form and completely covered the Pancham, making Sensei appear even larger and intimidating than he already was. Sensei glared menacingly down at the Pancham, red eyes glowing in the dusk low-light.

Pancham suddenly regretted all of the choices she’d made leading to this moment. She messed up. Big time. That was not a normal Greninja!! NO WAY! What was that thing eating!? The souls of the damned?!

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“A Greninja?!” Andi exclaimed. “Whatever, Pancham and I can take you! Pancham, use Tackle!”

Sensei stared at Pancham with a questioning look that read, “You sure about that, buddy?”

Ice ran through Pancham’s veins. Tackle? Please! Like that would do anything to that Greninja. No, she was NOT fighting that thing! Pancham decided to be smart about this and ran back to her Trainer, grabbed the bag she stole, and delicately placed it next to the horror-Greninja’s Trainer. Pancham darted back behind her Trainer’s legs for protection, holding on tight and shivering.

“Pancham??” Andi questioned sharply.

Serena, extremely satisfied by Pancham’s groveling, felt like this was an even better outcome than winning. “Look, we don’t have to battle. Your Pancham returned my bag, and she clearly doesn’t want to fight anymore. Don’t force her to battle because of some petty problem you have with Urbain. That’s not fair to Pancham.” Serena might be being a little tiny bit of an asshole with this whole battle, but she would never force a Pokemon to battle her that didn’t want to.

“Fine!” Andi relented. “I hate to admit it, but you’re right. This was supposed to make US feel better, not you! Your Greninja is really something else though. You’re fresh off the train, but you’re no newbie, are you?”

Serena snorted. “No, I’m not. Sensei and I have been together for six years now. Did the league circuit and all that.” She gave Sensei a nod and returned him to his Pokeball.

“We really didn’t stand a chance did we?” Andi stated glumly.

“That was some unconventional battle! I’ve never seen a Pokemon get knocked out from Mean Look before!” Urbain mocked, walking over casually from his own complete trouncing of a battle he’d dished out.

“Please tell me you won, Andre!” Andi asked desperately.

“Nope.” Andre hung his head in shame. “Can’t believe I thought I’d score a next-day comeback. My Pokemon and I are so let down.”

Andi reassuringly put her hand on Andre’s shoulder. “This is why you and I get along so well. We even lose together.”

“If you’re that upset, wait till night falls and come try again!” Urbain said good-naturedly with a grin.

“No way! We’re not dealing with you again – not even if we meet during the Royale!” Andi vowed. “Pancham says sorry about the bag. Now au revoir!” The two trainers and Pancham abruptly made their escape.

Urbain raised his hand out for a fist bump towards Serena. At her lack of returning the gesture, he said, “Don’t leave me hanging!”

Serena blinked. “Oh.” She fist bumped him back. Was that a thing in Lumiose now?

“That was huge! We won our first battle side by side! We make a great team, the real makings of a great power duo!” Urbain declared, pumping his fists by his side.

“We did. Next time, let’s have a proper double battle!” she agreed. Urbain might not be at the same level as her battle-prowess wise, but that didn’t matter. He was a dynamic character that would definitely bring some interesting strategies when working as a team! It would be fun!

“So there’s gonna be a next time then, huh?” Urbain grinned impishly and folded his hands behind his head.

Not going to allow herself to be caught off-foot again, Serena confidently agreed, “Yeah, there’s going to be a next time for sure. That is, if you can keep up with me.”

“Then I’ll train extra hard to make that next time happen!” he whooped, determined to get even stronger.

Without warning, red pillars of light materialized around them.

“Oh man. It’s nightfall already?” Urbain scratched his head worriedly, darting his eyes around him in every direction. “And here we are in a battle zone. Rotten luck.”

“Am I missing something here? What’s happening?” She was puzzled. Serena looked at the red holo-walls with disdain. “I didn’t expect their holo-tech to be this pervasive.”

“We gotta move, so here’s the deal, super-short version… Battle zones are intense! Anyone who finds you in here can challenge you to a battle on the spot!” he cautioned. “I know I said I’d give you a low key trek to the hotel, sorry about this.” Urbain cursed to himself. This was about the least inconspicuous thing that could have happened! First the bag-napping, now this! “I’ll make it up to you, I promise.”

“No, this is in no way your fault. Please, don’t worry unnecessarily over it,” Serena reassured. “Besides, it doesn’t sound that bad based on what you said. But honestly, I’d rather not battle any more tonight. I’m severely jet lagged, and would prefer to get a head start on getting readjusted to the time zone.”

“Gotcha, Hotel Z is right nearby. Let’s get going! My Pokemon here can take care of your bag so it won’t weigh you down.” Urbain gestured to Tepig and Chikorita. “Totodile will stay with me, just in case.”

Serena raised an eyebrow. “You sure? My bag already got stolen once by Pokemon today.”

“Nah, they’ll be fine! Other Pokemon will leave ‘em alone. Plus, those two can climb fences and get into places where people can’t follow ‘em.” Urbain was very confident in his Pokemon’s ability to handle the task.

“Alright.” She squatted down to hand the bag to the two. “You both look very brave and strong, please do your best to ensure my bag makes it to the hotel safely. I’ll make sure to reward you handsomely if you do.”

Chikorita and Tepig puffed their chests out in pride, now taking this courier job much more seriously. They accepted the bag with great care and bounded off.

From beside Urbain, Totodile pouted, feeling left out. “Toh, toh…”

Serena noticed the Pokemon’s dour mood. “Don’t worry, Totodile, you’re getting the hardest job out of you three! You have to make sure we make it to the hotel safely. Urbain must have chosen you to stay because you’re the strongest.”

Totodile peered up at her, eyes sparkling, and turned to Urbain for confirmation.

Urbain faltered, not really expecting Totodile's puppy eyes. “Uh, what–” Serena gave him a firm look, silently screaming at him not to crush his Pokemon’s dreams. “Oh, yeah. Yeah! You’re so strong, Totodile! There’s no one else I’d trust with our safety more!”

“Tohto, toh, to!!” Totodile burst with life, very excited to play his role now. “Toh!”

“We gotta hightail it outta this battle zone. Follow me! Totodile, you stick close to the front to guard!”

“Toto!” Totodile affirmed seriously.

“This way!” Urbain guided as he started running, leading the group towards the exit. Serena trailed behind, following his lead as they made several turns down alleyways. “Okay, we’re almost there.”

“What have we got here?” Serena whipped around, startled by the waitress’ sudden voice from behind her. “A pair of battle zone loiterers! You must be after a Pokemon battle. So square up and give me your best shot!”

Remembering the last battle he just saw of hers, Urbain winced. “Uhhh, I wouldn’t challenge her if I were you! And anyways, my friend here isn’t part of–”

“I don’t believe anyone asked you!” the waitress snapped at him, cutting him off.

Urbain covered his eyes with his hand and shook his head slightly. “Hey, I tried.”

Serena waved off Urbain’s concern. “I appreciate the effort. I might be dead tired, but I can pull through one battle.” She would gladly deal with this rude woman.

The waitress flipped her pony tail over her shoulder and glared at Serena. “The points I earn from trouncing you will propel me up the ranks!” Riding high and confident, she sent out the cutest smallest bean of a Cleffa.

The bean let out the most adorable squeaking war cry as she raised her little baby sized arms up to try to be ferocious, “Cleee!” The Cleffa was possibly the tiniest Cleffa Serena had ever seen with the biggest doe eyes. The sheer size of its eyes made it look even smaller.

“Oh, no,” Urbain muttered under his breath, horrified. “That poor Cleffa.” He had seen just how powerful Serena’s Greninja was. She was clearly a very experienced Trainer. More than experienced. She was undoubtedly a veteran Trainer.

The Cleffa was about to go down, hard.

Serena turned her head to Urbain, face stricken. “Actually, I don’t know if I can do this. I mean, morally.” That might have been the most baby looking Pokemon ever. Did it hatch, like, an hour ago with pre-programed maximum adorable genes?!

This was NOT the same as battling that Pancham!

“Shut up!! Send out your Pokemon already!” the waitress grumbled.

“Clef!!” Cleffa looked equally as irritated, glaring at Serena with her perfect shiny doll-eyes. She curled her little arms up in a “come at me” gesture and started shadow boxing. This Cleffa really did perfectly match her Trainer.

“Arceus, please don’t send me to hell for this.” Serena quickly ran through the mental math of who had the least damaging move on her team and who could be the gentlest. Shit, no one on her team was particularly gentle! But if she had to choose… “Go Gattaca!” Her Sylveon emerged in a shower of sparkles. “Please, please, please don’t kill the Cleffa!” Serena begged desperately.

“Syl?” Gattaca had the audacity to look confused by the direction.

“Cleffa, use Tackle!”

“Uh,” Serena stuttered, unsure of how to handle a battle for the first time in years. “Gattaca, just- just tap it lightly with one of your ribbons, okay? Like 5%- no 2% power!” Serena pinched two of her fingers together to emphasize just how small she meant.

“Syl!” Gattaca nodded in confirmation.

“Oh, thank Arceus,” Serena sighed in relief that Gattaca understood.

The little Cleffa came charging in at the Sylveon, armed with a confidence of a thousand burning suns, and about to execute the most epic Tackle of her life. “Cle–”

Gattaca, as instructed, used one of her ribbons to bat Cleffa away, sending it rocketing at high speeds before it slammed into the side of the nearby building with a loud resounding crack and a cloud of dust. Debris fell from the point of contact on the wall.

Due to her round body, Cleffa bounced off the building and bopped along the street, like a bouncy ball slowly losing momentum, until she skidded, face down on the pavement, to a stop back in front of the Sylveon.

Cleffa was bruised, battered, and most notably not moving.

“Syl~ve!!” Gattaca trilled merrily over the defeated limp body of her enemy. She did an excellent job!

“C…le…f….” Cleffa weakly and painfully mumbled, barely audible.

Oh, thank Arceus, it wasn’t dead! Serena hid her face in her hands. Gattaca did NOT understand!! That was way too much power! She should have never trusted her to be gentle!!!

“CLEFFA!” her Trainer yelped, the worry and panic clear in her voice, rushing over and dropping to her knees in front of the downed Pokemon. Serena hurriedly dug into her purse.

“I am SO sorry!!! Please use this Max Revive!” Serena shoved the Max Revive into the waitress’ hands who administered it promptly.

Though now out of danger, the Cleffa was still very woozy and looked worse for wear. The waitress returned Cleffa to her Pokeball. She had her Bunnelby as well, but wasn’t going to risk their health too. “Another night spent battling in the Z-A Royale with no points to show for it…” she muttered.

“Um, ma’am, you need to take your Cleffa to a Pokemon Center immediately!” Serena pressed, genuinely worried about the health of Cleffa.

“I tried to tell you!” Urbain shook his head, also looking stricken. “And Serena’s right! You need to leave, now!”

“Toto! To, dile!” Totodile insisted, just as upset.

Coming to her senses and snapping out of her shock-riddled brain, the waitress scrambled back to her feet. “R-Right!!” she darted off, sprinting.

Urbain watched as she left, unable to tear his eyes away from Cleffa’s Pokeball. “Honestly? I think I heard it pop like a balloon when it hit that wall.”

“I’m going to have nightmares about this,” Serena said solemnly, eyes distant.

“Syl~ve~on~!” Gattaca chimed with a little dance, wiggling her ribbons and tail, cheering herself on for her good work of utterly destroying that precious little angel.

“No!! You don’t get to be happy about that!” Serena spat, pointing at Gattaca accusingly. “I trusted you to be nice!!”

“Ve,” the Sylveon scoffed and gave her a look that said, “I WAS nice!”

“Hey.” Urbain caught Serena’s attention. “So here’s my advice as your kind new friend who loves helping people…” Even though his evaluation of himself was true, it sounded incredibly sarcastic. “Stay out of the battle zones.”

“Yeah, no SHIT!” Serena exclaimed, the most frazzled she’d been all day. She glared at Gattaca and returned her to her Pokeball.

“Let’s get the hell out of here before someone else comes after us looking for a battle!” Urbain shuddered. “I don’t think I could handle watching another repeat of Cleffa.”

As they continued to make their way out of the battle zone, their path was blocked once again. Three Trainers stood just in front of the exit, all itching for a battle and sights trained on Urbain and Serena.

Urbain worriedly glanced off to the side, scratching the back of his head, and unsure of how to proceed.

“Thank Arceus it’s not another Cleffa,” Serena breathed in relief at the sight of the Honedge, Pansear, and Hearacross. All opponents she was completely morally okay with dispatching ruthlessly and were decidedly not newborn baby adorable beans.

“Look,” Urbain started, hoping this time he could resolve this with words. “I’m trying to get our hotel guest to safety. Let us through, would you?” He gestured to Serena beside him, then held his hands up in a placating gesture.

The battle girl uncrossed her arms and sneered, “Too bad for your guest! Once you step into a battle zone, you’re a target like everyone else!”

Urbain unceremoniously dropped his arms down by his side and looked defeated. No, he steeled himself, Urbain couldn’t allow another Cleffa to happen. Never again.

“If you want a target,” Urbain walked in front of Serena, “I’m right here!” He dropped into a battle ready stance.

“Toto.” Totodile matched his Trainer’s determination.

“Kyururu!” a Pokemon cry came from above. Serena and Urbain looked up, following the noise. Floette gracefully floated down between the two parties preparing for battle. When she raised her flower that had been blocking her view, Floette chirped excitedly upon seeing Serena.

“A Floette with a black flower, huh?” the jogger Trainer commented sharply. “You don’t see that every day. Let’s see how it battles!”

Floette looked over her shoulder back at the other Trainers and glared at them. How dare they interrupt her reunion with Serena! She swung her flower around and started to charge up a Light of Ruin, the only appropriate response to such a slight!

“NO! Don’t hit them!” Urbain reached out frantically, desperately trying to prevent another Cleffa incident.

Fine. Floette pouted. Urbain always ruined her fun. She fired off her blinding cannon of a move juuuust above the three trainers heads and into the sky above. Floette reveled in seeing the beam’s light flicker away against the night sky.

There was a moment of silence before the three Trainers glanced at each other, then stumbled over themselves to scramble away, fleeing as fast as they could. Floette cackled. Urbain had been right! That was much funnier than actually hitting them with Light of Ruin!

Floette turned back around to face Urbain and Serena, ready for praise.

“Nicely done, Floette!” Urbain, so very relieved it didn’t turn into another Cleffa situation, was completely fine with not saying anything about Floette’s almost murder. “But maybe you should save that Light of Ruin move for when it really counts, huh?” he commented instead with a slight laugh.

Floette stubbornly puffed out her cheeks. That wasn’t what she was looking for.

“Floette!” Serena greeted her cheerfully. “That was some crazy power! You must have been training hard!”

“Kryu!” Floette trilled happily at the acknowledgement. She floated around Serena while preening and moving her flower about like a sword. “Ku, ruru.” Yes, Floette had been training, thank you for noticing.

“Woah, Floette really likes you!” Urbain marveled.

“And I really like Floette! Your flower looks extra pretty today! It must be basking in the glow of that Light of Ruin you just fired!” Serena complemented. Floette twirled her flower bashfully with a blush. There was a reason why Serena was her favorite. She then floated up to sit on Serena’s head. Floette pointed excitedly with her flower towards the hotel.

Serena chuckled. “Of course, m’lady, as your loyal steed, I shall lead you wherever you please! Order away!”

“Kryuuuu~!”

“You’re really good with Pokemon,” Urbain noted, watching their easy exchange. “Hey, how long did you say you’re staying in Lumiose?” Serena was definitely the kind of person he wanted on Team MZ!

“Thank you. I’m not quite sure, I haven’t exactly booked a return ticket yet.” Serena had new, fun, and exciting megalomaniacs to deal with first before she decided where to settle down in Kalos again.

Urbain smiled softly, meeting Serena’s gaze. “So what you’re saying is that there’s a chance I could convince you to stay longer?”

‘Why is he so charming?!’ Serena screamed in her head. The line had come out of nowhere! He can’t just say something like that casually!

Tickled by the exchange, Floette leaned down from her perch to pat Serena’s face, snapping her out of it.

“I mean,” Serena bumbled out an answer, “I don’t have any plans yet so…”

Urbain beamed and did a small victory jump. “I’ll take it! A chance is all I’ll need!” Wow, this boy was NOT good for her heart! “You’ll see. Besides, once you see how great Hotel Z is, you’ll never want to leave!”

“Hotel Z, right,” Serena weakly tried to pivot. “Let’s go there.”

“Great!” Urbain’s 10,000 kilowatt smile was still going strong. “Follow me! I don’t think I’ve ever been more relieved to leave a battle zone.”

After exiting the red holo-gateway, Hotel Z was only a few paces away. The building was an exemplary example of old Lumiose architecture, complete with the cobble stone courtyard and climbing ivy.

“Welcome to our humble establishment,” Urbain bowed as if he was a butler and looked up at Serena from under his eyelashes cheekily, “Hotel Z! You won’t find a more tranquil, relaxing stay anywhere in Lumiose…” Urbain’s confidence faltered, wincing as he trailed off. “Because we don’t have a single other guest,” he finished ruefully.

Serena smiled warmly at Urbain. “A tranquil, relaxing stay is just what I’m looking for,” she announced primly.

He chuckled. “Great! Come on in!” Urbain held the door open for her. “After you.”

“Thank you.” She looked around the lobby, it really had that wonderful rustic cozy feeling. She couldn’t help but smile upon seeing the patchwork sewn curtains and the mis-matched chairs. This space had AZ written all over it. Serena loved it. Floette left her spot on Serena’s head and drifted back to AZ.

“I’m back, AZ!” Urbain called out, entering after her, and letting the door close. He met AZ at the counter. “Check it out – I brought us a guest!”

Serena withheld the snort she wanted to make upon seeing the giant of a man in the flesh wearing his dapper little suit manning the comically short reception desk. With his color pallet, bangs, and bow tie he looked exactly like a Dartrix! Imagine a Rowlet in a tiny bell hop uniform and hat!!! Aaah!! She needed to make that happen and get her hands on a few Rowlet for this hotel. A fleet of adorable gentleman Pokemon butlers was exactly what would set Hotel Z apart! The more Serena thought about it, the more ideas she had for this place!

But before she could get to any of those finer details, she had a grand mysterious entrance to make.

“It’s been a while, AZ,” Serena said from where she was looming in the doorway, eyes cast downwards. Serena was taking much joy in making her entrance as unnecessarily dramatic as possible. “When I heard you were running a hotel, I didn’t believe it and had to come see for myself.” She slowly started to approach, then snapped her head up to meet AZ’s gaze.

AZ’s eyes widened in recognition. “Serena…?”

But Serena was nowhere near done with her bit. “Wow, you’ve really cleaned yourself up over the years. A vest and a bow tie? Really AZ? I’m shocked. You look way less homeless now. What else have I missed in 5 years? It’s comforting that Floette is still as trigger happy as ever though. At least she hasn’t changed.”

AZ smiled at her words, glad to see that Serena was just as theatrical as ever. “It’s good to see you again. You’ve grown up.”

“That is what happens when a normal human gets older. We’re not all immortal.” Serena rolled her eyes, then matched AZ’s smile. “But jokes aside, it’s good to see you and Floette again too. I’m really happy to see that the years have finally been kind to you. 3,000 years is too much pain for anyone, even you. You deserve this.”

“Thank you.” AZ’s heart warmed. “Life has been treating me well, and I hope the same for you.”

Urbain blinked. “Oh, you and AZ know each other?” Ah, that’s why she came to Lumiose after seeing his video! Not only did his ad work, but it also reunited two friends! Urbain really was excellent at making videos.

AZ nodded. “Yes, I owe Serena a great debt after everything she did for me five years ago.” Not only had Serena reunited him with Floette, but she had done everything in her power to help him get back on his feet afterwards, even if he refused most of her help. They had spoken at length together about his past, his sins, and his regrets. But that didn’t scare Serena off.

Instead, she sympathized with his struggle of having the weight of the world on his shoulders and not making perfect choices that came with awful consequences. Serena continued to spend time with him, true quality time. They joked together, laughed together, ate together, and cried together. It made AZ feel like a person again for the first time in many, many years.

AZ would forever be grateful to Serena for that.

“I’ve told you already, you don’t owe me anything,” Serena insisted. “Just let Lemis hang out with Floette, and we’re even.” Lemis would fit in the hotel’s secluded courtyard out front, which was perfect. It was cute watching a giant hulking bird of death be best friends with a dainty Floette. Those two could gab for hours over their ancient war stories.

‘Immortals,’ Serena rolled her eyes.

“Your stay here will be on the house,” AZ declared with a nod. Floette spending time with Yveltal was nowhere near enough now that he finally had some means to pay her back.

“No, it will not!” Serena stated, narrowing her eyes. “Urbain told me your hotel is struggling! I will be paying in full and tipping a LOT!” she emphasized.

AZ shook his head mirthfully. “It’s a kind offer, but I refuse to accept money from you.”

Serena pulled her wallet out of her tote bag and dropped an exorbitantly huge sum of cash onto the counter. “I can more than afford to stay here, so I will be paying! I am a paying customer. Emphasis on paying!” Serena challenged.

AZ pushed the money back towards her. “You’re overpaying!” he countered.

Serena scoffed. “You’re going to take it, or I will sneak into the lobby at night and put it in the register myself!”

“It’s too much, and even if it wasn’t, I won’t take money from you,” AZ denied staunchly.

Serena smirked. “If it makes you feel any better, you can consider the money my charitable contribution to the preservation of Kalos’ esteemed history as a part of my league responsibilities, or a generous donation to the elderly, either works.” Serena looked at AZ innocently with wide eyes. “We can’t have our national relic dying on us or destitute again, can we?”

AZ’s face hardened, becoming stormy and serious. Serena looked just as vicious and intense as AZ.

Urbain’s eyes widened. He’d never seen AZ look like that before! ‘Oh shit, she pissed off AZ!! …Though, she’s not wrong, we do need the money.’

But to Urbain’s utter surprise, they both erupted in laughter.

AZ brightened. “It is good to see you again.”

“Yeah, it is good to see you too, gramps.” Serena smiled genuinely, voice light.

Serena truly had missed him.

“Speaking of, we have to get you a website for this hotel. I know you’re very out of touch,” Serena lamented sarcastically while checking her nails, “but I’ll painstakingly teach you how to use a Rotom Phone to manage reservations. Before you go off again with, “back in my day,” gramps, back in your day you had sticks and rocks for tools. The stone age is over. It’s time to adapt.”

AZ sighed. “Serena, I–”

“And I’m still not over the Holo Caster thing,” Serena cut him off. “I know five years must not feel like anything to you, but it was a long time for me. Make it up to me by doing this.”

“I’m truly sorry, Serena,” AZ apologized sincerely, forlorn. “Five years isn’t nothing.”

“You’re more than forgiven as long as you don’t let it happen again,” Serena relented. The lack of contact had really hurt her. Serena had needed his support, she had come to rely on it after everything five years ago, and it was a struggle to be suddenly stripped of that when she needed it most.

“Alright,” AZ acquiesced with a long tired sigh, “I’ll give the Rotom Phone a try.”

“Great!” Serena bounced back cheerfully.

Urbain chuckled at the exchange. He didn’t realize AZ had friends, let alone close friends! “You guys must be really close, huh? So how did you meet each other before Hotel Z?” Urbain had to know the story behind how such a pretty stylish girl ended up being best friends with the hulking grandpa that was AZ.

“Wow, you really don’t recognize me even after knowing my name,” Serena deadpanned. “Our meeting was broadcast on live television.” Serena took off the glasses she was wearing. “How about now?”

With the glasses removed, it finally clicked who she was, and Urbain blurted out, “Arceus, you’re Serena! You’re the Champion!” Urbain very much knew who she was! He watched all of the videos of her matches! Her battles were wild and her strategies awe-inspiring. She was someone every trainer in the region studied and looked up to!

Wait, that meant the Sylveon that did horrible things to that Cleffa was THAT Sylveon!! He winced. Yikes, no wonder that happened. It was like trying to delicately knock a pebble off a table with a shotgun.

“Yes, that’s me,” Serena confirmed airily as she admired the glasses in her hands. “Wow, these fake glasses really are killer.”

‘Well, now I gotta try even harder to convince her to stay! She’s exactly the kind of member Team MZ is looking for! With the Champion on our side, we can protect Lumiose no problem!’ Urbain resolved. ‘She’s not at all what I imagined THE Serena to be like. I like the real Serena a lot more!’

AZ chuckled, enjoying Urbain’s shock. AZ hadn’t realized Urbain didn’t know Serena’s title, but was glad he got to witness the rug being pulled out from under him. Serena’s travel bag caught his eye. More precisely, the Zygarde cell crawling out of her travel bag. It was an omen to ponder over later.

“I was concerned when a bag arrived with no owner,” AZ explained now that Serena’s bag was on his mind. “That is why I sent Floette out to seek you. It seems my worries were unfounded, after all, you had Serena by your side.”

“No, I’m glad you did! Floette saved our skins with her Light of Ruin – it’s a heck of a move,” Urbain applauded. “You’re so wise, AZ, I can almost believe you really ARE three thousand years old like you always say!” he snickered.

Serena giggled, loving the fact that apparently no one believed AZ’s age was real, but cut herself off with an unwilling yawn. She was dead tired. Far, far too much had happened today. She needed her beauty sleep!

Noticing this, AZ nodded at her. “Serena, before you retire, pray, allow me a few words. I hope you’ll indulge me as your host.” AZ straightened, standing up a little taller. “Treasure your companions, and never betray that faith. That is all I wish to say.”

“I understand, AZ,” Serena acknowledged sincerely. AZ had made countless mistakes in his past, regrets he would carry with him forever, and this sage advice was the culmination of his entire life. Those were the words AZ now lived by, his lesson finally learned that day at her Champion parade.

Serena was never going to be one to betray her Pokemon, but she understood that he was speaking about more than just her Pokemon. He was speaking as a ruler, a king, advising her on how she should be handling her Champion title. To AZ, a man who had lived 3,000 years and was a king of Kalos in his own right, “companions” meant “the people of Kalos” and “the people you share this life with.”

His words also served as a subtle criticism of her lack of action. It stung, but he was right.

Serena knew AZ saw what she saw was afoot in Lumiose. AZ had been right beside her five years ago, after all, and was privy to all of the details. He was one of the few that saw the same side of Lysandre that she did.

“Good.” AZ nodded, satisfied, hunching back over his cane once more. “Room 202 is yours to use.” He handed her the key to the room.

“You can take the elevator to the second floor,” Urbain provided helpfully. “Rest up for tonight, then come meet me down here in the lobby tomorrow morning!”

“Alright. Thank you for your help today, Urbain. It was very kind of you. I’m excited to get to know you better during my stay.” Serena smiled brightly.

“Nah, it was nothing! I’m happy to help!” Urbain blushed slightly and scratched the back of his head, looking away. “And I can’t wait to get to know you too.”

“Well then, goodnight to both of you.” Serena grabbed her bag, and headed into the elevator with a wave.

Once the elevator doors closed, Floette hovered over to Urbain, who was still staring at the elevator, and slyly nudged him with her flower

“What?” Urbain blinked, then looked at Floette’s knowing look. “No, it’s not like that!” he insisted. Floette tittered mirthfully, not at all believing him. “Okay, maybe a little like that. But just a little!” he conceded.

AZ chortled. “Serena is a wonderful young lady,” he commented approvingly.

Urbain groaned, hiding his face in his hands. “Not you too, AZ.”



Z • ──── ✿৻(๑'ᵕ'๑) ──── • A​



*Knock, knock*

“Hey. Sorry, I know I said you should sleep, but can we talk for a sec?” Urbain’s muffled voice came from the other side of her door.

Serena was so thankful she hadn’t changed or gotten ready for bed yet. She scrambled to open the door.

Urbain bowed to her once more. “Begging your pardon, dear guest! I neglected to show you our hotel’s true gem – a stunning panorama.” He rose from the bow and winked. “That means, “C’mon, you gotta see the roof!””

Serena curtsied back. “Why of course, good sir, I’d be delighted.” She linked their arms together, and grinned up at him. “You may escort me.” Serena reveled in the fact that it was Urbain this time who was startled and struggled to make eye contact until they parted once they reached the roof. Ha!

“Bit late now, but welcome back to Lumiose City!” Urbain walked to the railing and looked out over the twinkling lights. “It’s got its weird parts, but it’s a good place. I like it here.”

Serena joined him at the railing. “A very apt assessment, I agree.”

Urbain’s face turned uncharacteristically serious. “Listen… I owe AZ big-time for all the help he’s given me since I got here. I want to do right by him in return. Not to put you on the spot, but since you seem really close to AZ… think you could give me a hand?”

Serena understood that look well, the unspoken weight of one’s past. “I’d be happy to.” She was never one who could ignore an earnest plight. Despite everything, Serena still had a bleeding heart. Besides, AZ was her dear friend, she’d always be there to help him.

“You’re the best!” Urbain grinned, sticking his fist out. Serena returned the fist bump.

Even with the chaos and re-emerging trauma the day had brought, Serena was glad to be back in Lumiose. Her return brought back the companionship she’d gone years without. AZ really did know what he was talking about, huh? That wise old man.

As she gazed out at Prism Tower, Serena made a solemn vow to herself that she would never allow anything like Lysandre to ever happen to this city and her region again. Her extended sabbatical in Hoenn was over. Serena had been running for too long. It was time to take a stand and show Kalos that she was here to protect its future.

It was time to be a true Champion.

The one Serena had desperately wished Diantha was, and failed to be, for Kalos five years ago.




End Notes

Nickname central:
Sensei (Greninja) – because he acts like a know-it-all wise old man and tries to teach the other party members things like he knows better. He does not know better.
Gattaca (Sylveon) – named after the nucleobases of DNA (G, A, T, C) and the excellent sci-fi movie about genetic bio-engineering, GATTACA.
Lemis (Yveltal) – named after the shortened slang of Les Miserables, Le Mis. The book title translates to English literally as “The Miserable Ones,” but can also mean "the wretched," or "the outcasts." All of which fit Yveltal very well. Also because the whole book is about (among many other things) destruction, death, and revolution in Paris.

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My favorite bit of NPC dialogue is when you're on a random rooftop or street and then some guy just has a balloon over his head that says something like, “Hey, remember that power outage from 5 years ago? That was wild,” or “I liked the city better 5 years ago,” or “Whatever happened to that Holo Caster news lady?” like “that Holo Caster news lady” WASN'T an E4 member.

The sewers were unironically the best looking map in the game. Also, not me in the Lumiose sewers continuously saying, “We’ve got to get you out of here, Marius,” and looking at a Litwick and going, “Marius, what’s wrong with you today, you look as if you’ve seen a ghost.” I named my sewer Litwick Marius. I love my sewer Litwick.

So I have some gripes with the game lol, but I actually loved playing it!! The battle system was REALLY fun, customization was excellent, the new Megas were 10/10, and I loved the characters. I just felt like the plot was thinner and a little weaker than it could have been. That, and there were a lot of underused characters.

Why Serena? The plot of the PLZA game becomes infinitely more complicated if the protag is the XY protag lol. This is by no means going to be a bashing of PLZA, it’s going to be a reimagining of the plot by beefing it up with all of those little things I know we ALL wished would have happened. Also, I’m not officially saying yet that I’m making Quasartico evil lol, Serena is ✨paranoid and traumatized✨
 
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Chapter 2, Part 1: Said the Spider to the Fly New

Slayerofthewind

Chaos Gremlin
Pronouns
she/her
Said the Spider to the Fly

Chapter 2, Part 1

Chapter summary:

“Will you walk into my parlour?” said the Spider to the Fly,
"'Tis the prettiest little parlour that ever you did spy;
The way into my parlour is up a winding stair,
And I have many curious things to shew when you are there."
"Oh no, no," said the little Fly, "to ask me is in vain,
For who goes up your winding stair can ne'er come down again."

-OR-

By asking her to join the Z-A Royale, Quasartico had given her the keys to the kingdom and was inviting Serena to wreck their entire lives with open arms. And she’d do it with a smile on her face and a pep in her step.





Serena woke up in a delightfully vindictive mood that inspired a very good idea of how to kick off her plan to decimate Quasartico and everything they stood for.

If evil needed their ass kicked, it was time to break out the miniskirt and thigh highs again. She would become a specter of the past and remind everyone who had been mollified by her extended absence just who they were dealing with.

Not that the general public knew what she wore during her original journey, but for those who did know and remembered her, people who now had positions of power, the symbolism would ring abundantly clear. And those people were the exact ones she needed to put the fear of Arceus in and show that Serena was not messing around.

This wasn’t Serena the model and superstar showing up for a visit.

No.

It was Serena the Hero of Kalos, defeater of Team Flare, and Champion at their door step, striking fear in the hearts of the damned with her miniskirt. For those who knew, her haunting visage would be an undeniable echo of her past victories.

Serena was back in every sense of the word, and this was her battle armor.

Serena cackled as she dressed, pulling on her black collared blouse, high waisted red miniskirt, and black thigh high socks, her dramatic little heart singing. She wrapped the very bottom of her hair in a hair tie. She pulled a chunk on either side free from the pony tail and let it join her longer bangs framing her face. Iconography was truly a wonderful thing.

Serena thrived on melodramatic mischief veiled by a coat of glamor and manners. She loved being a menace, but with nuanced subtlety and plausible deniability. Clever theatricality was truly a lost art.

Serena laced up her black high tops and donned her pink felt hat, placing white sunglasses on top of it. With a final hair fluff in the mirror, she grabbed her pink tote bag and headed out the door.



Z • ──── ☆⌒(ゝ。∂) ✨ ──── • A​



The lobby existed in muted harmony, nothing stood out too much on its own. The mismatched chairs with scattered patterned pillows didn’t clash, it was wholly charming. The organized chaos aesthetic at its finest. Something both uniquely AZ and undeniably old-Lumiose. Serena loved it.

Urbain sat in a blue chair at the low coffee table with Floette by his side. “Hey! Good morning,” Urbain greeted Serena with a wave like it wasn’t 4:00 in the afternoon. No, he did not sit here waiting for her to wake up all day.

“Good morning,” Serena said with a laugh. She very much knew exactly what time it was. Serena reached into her bag and pulled out a paper box. “These PokePuffs are for your three Pokemon. I promised them a reward. Please thank them again for everything they did last night.”

“For sure! They’re gonna love it,” Urbain cheered. “Rough day yesterday, huh? Travel, jet lag, your bag gets stolen, then you get dragged into the Z-A Royale…” He shook his head, drawing Serena’s attention to his hair. Urbain’s hair was like strawberry lemonade. She had no idea how his dye job looked so good and perfectly complemented his skin tone. “I’m glad you rested enough! You look much more refreshed now than you did when we met.” He stumbled to add, “Not that you didn’t look great then too!”

Serena laughed again. “Yes, I feel much better now! The bed was very comfortable.” It really wouldn’t be hard for Serena to get the hotel customers after she put in a little work. “The Z-A Royale… That’s the whole mess with the battle zone, right?” Serena questioned.

“The Z-A Royale's a big Pokemon battle tournament headed by Quasartico that’s taking Lumiose by storm! I’m competing in it too, actually! Practically flying up the ranks.” Urbain scratched his cheek and looked very smug.

“I don’t doubt that,” Serena agreed. “From last night, I got the impression that you’d be quite the interesting trainer. Why did you decide to join this tournament and not the Gym circuit?"

Urbain blushed slightly from her acknowledgement. “I’m trying to become the strongest Trainer around so I can help protect Lumiose. This is actually what I wanted your help with. Remember? Our talk last night on the roof? I know this is sudden, but can you join the Z-A Royale too, Serena?”

“Come again?” Serena asked, baffled. How did joining a tournament have anything to do with helping AZ?

Serena’s Rotom Phone buzzed and popped out of her pocket.

*You’ve received a message!*

Dear Serena,​
You are invited to join the Z-A Royale, a battle tournament to determine the greatest Pokemon Trainers in Lumiose City. Anyone who attains the highest rank, Rank A, will earn the right to call themselves one of Lumiose’s strongest Trainers and be granted a wish, as long as it is in our power to fulfill. If you wish to take part, please open the attached file to install the Z-A Royale app on your device. We eagerly await your enrollment.​
Sincerely,​
The Z-A Royale staff​

Serena’s heart skipped a beat. How did they get this number?! This was NOT a public number! This was her personal phone. Not the line set up through the league that went through several assistants and administrators before potentially forwarding something to Serena.

“I bet that was an invite to the Z-A Royale, right? Perfect timing!” Urbain tucked his hands behind his head. “I figured they’d invite you, since you held your own when you weren’t even signed up. And obviously because you’re the Champion and all.”

How do they KNOW that Serena was in a battle zone last night?!

‘The holo-tech.’ Serena’s veins turned to ice. ‘It’s not just barriers, they were watching.’ Serena wanted to go back upstairs and scream into her pillow about how incredibly slimy and unethical this all was. It made her feel like shit just thinking about it.

Serena might want to curb stomp evil under her dainty little foot, but she wasn’t a monster. She had empathy, sometimes more empathy than she should for people. Especially after Lysandre, who refused to look further than his own feet to see the consequences and effect his actions had on other people.

Which is why Serena had held out a smidgen of hope that she’d been wrong somehow, but that was shattered now, a pile of ash on the ground. They really had bought out Lysandre Labs, not just their patents, but the company as a whole along with all of their data records. There was no question about it now.

Holo-tech spyware to monitor people through their holo-tech, Holo Casters included, was something Lysandre had created and used, but never made public. Serena had been so relieved to hear it had been destroyed by Dexio and Sina long ago after defeating Lysandre in Team Flare’s HQ.

Looks like the “Masked Heroes” didn’t do a good enough job. Pathetic. Those two were always late to the party, but never failed to present their petty contributions as a huge triumph. Serena really shouldn’t have believed their words with full confidence. Sure, they might have destroyed the spy machine, but they didn’t ensure one could never be made again or delete the data.

Not only was Lysandre’s spyware machine back and in use, but was being used to monitor every nook and cranny of the city!

Quasartico wasn’t even denying it or trying to be secretive!! They were flaunting the use of spyware right in her face! The gall!

And the sheer nerve they had to contact her directly, knowing full well exactly who Serena was, to invite her to take part in their little tournament like they were doing her a favor. Their invitation was so patronizing! “Will earn the right to call themselves one of Lumiose’s strongest Trainers??” SHE WAS THE CHAMPION!!

They were belittling her while also implying that somehow Quasartico’s reach extended past Serena’s own dominion and authority as Champion by asserting they could offer her a “wish” she could not already fulfill herself. And if she participated, all the while, Quasartico could reap the benefits of having the backing of the Champion.

AS IF!

Oh, Serena was pissed. Did they think she was stupid just because Serena hadn’t been in Kalos? That she wouldn’t see everything they were doing with this move? Serena was very smart, thank you very much.

If they wanted the Champion, then they’d get her. She’d join their stupid tournament, but only under the guise of complacency. If Serena’s name and title were affiliated, more people than ever before would flock to the tournament, and the world’s press would be watching. If more eyes were watching Quasartico than ever before, perfect.

Serena made absolutely no promises about not being an utter nuisance in their battle royale unlike they’d ever seen before. She’d make them regret inviting her and drawing the attention of every person in Kalos.

Quasartico really wanted to challenge Serena to a media battle? Oh, she’d chop them up and eat them for breakfast. Please, like they stood a chance against her on the mass media battlefield, let alone in a Pokemon battle.

People constantly underestimated Serena because she was blonde and wore sparkles and pink. They wrote her off as an airheaded Champion who only beat an actress to get her title, and then ran away when she couldn’t handle the pressure.

People loved to look down on her as “just a ditzy little girl.” The masses convinced themselves that Serena must be a little pampered princess because they saw a young, pretty face in an unexpected position of power who flaunted their fame.

It’s like everyone collectively forgot just how vicious Serena could be, the fact that she’d set the record for fastest time to become Champion, and that no one had come even close to usurping her in five years. Serena was no angel, nor did she ever claim to be. Serena was a melodramatic, petty, nosy, overly-competitive instigator who would beat you up, take your money, and do it in style. Just because she had manners, elegance, and a sense of justice didn’t make Serena any less of a conniving mastermind who knew she was better than you. Her accidental subterfuge of making everyone think she’s simple and dumb really was the greatest prank Serena’s ever played. Her ghosts would be so proud!

Quasartico was always watching and spying, hm?

Fine.

Serena would tear down their castle and get Kalos and the whole world to watch Quasartico back. Every move they made would be monitored with a finely toothed comb. Let’s let Quasartico be the ones experiencing psychological terror for a change as Serena installed a new panopticon. More eyes meant more people to witness their deceit first hand as Serena calculatedly destroyed them while looking fabulous doing it.

They wanted a show? They’d get one.

By asking her to join the Z-A Royale, Quasartico had given her the keys to the kingdom and was inviting Serena to wreck their entire lives with open arms. And she’d do it with a smile on her face and a pep in her step.

Quasartico had no idea who they were dealing with.

Completely misreading her pause, Urbain commented, “I also got that message out of the blue after I did some battling here in Lumiose. It was a shock. The bigwigs around here really want to find a crop of strong Trainers!”

“You don’t find that odd at all?” Serena questioned skeptically. He wasn’t that simple, was he?

“Er, what do you mean?” Urbain asked.

“That they contacted you out of the blue,” she elaborated.

Urbain nodded and grinned, proud. “Word of mouth travels fast! If people are talking about me that much, it means I have a lot of potential as a Trainer, dontcha think?”

She’d expected too much of him. He really was gullible. “You didn’t give your phone number or email to anyone you battled during that time though, did you?”

“No, that would be weird. It’s not like any of them were that interesting either,” he dismissed.

She was going to have to spell it out for him wasn’t she? How could someone this cute be this dense?

Serena sighed. “Let’s say you’re right, and it was truly word of mouth, how did Quasartico find your contact information? All they had to go on was probably “that guy Urbain, I think!” and “he was blonde.” That’s not exactly helpful information in a city this big. And even if they did manage to track you down, it would have taken a long time. You got that message immediately. Don’t you find that weird?”

Serena didn’t want her new friend to be sucked into their lies. That, and she was using him as a case example to see how the average person would react when confronted with the truth. How much did people really not know what was going on?

Urbain blinked. “Huh, it is unusual now that you mention it, actually. What’s your point here?”

“My point is that I told no one that I was coming to Kalos, let alone to Lumiose City. You were the first person I talked to after arriving here. The media has been silent and does not know about me being in Kalos.” Serena glared at the message still displayed on her Rotom Phone. “How did Quasartico know? And how did they track down my personal private phone number, which no one should have beyond close friends, within a few hours and then knew to wait to send me that message until I had woken up at the very odd time of 4:00 pm?”

Urbain’s eyes flew wide. “Oh. Oh. I see. That shouldn’t be possible.”

“No, it shouldn’t,” Serena agreed.

“Flo…” Floette closed her eyes solemnly in agreement.

“…This is really not good, is it?” Urbain gulped.

“Correct, but “not good” isn’t really the term I’d use. “Complete structural unethical behavior and total illegal invasion of privacy of the masses” is more apt in this case.” Serena made a note not to forget to discover whatever other skeletons the company had in their closet too.

“Shit.” Urbain was silent for a beat. “…Okay, what are we going to do about it?”

Serena rolled her eyes. “We will be doing nothing. I, on the other hand, will be handling this as is my job.”

“C’mon, you can’t just drop that on me and expect me to do nothing!” he argued back. Urbain couldn’t just sit there! “I’m the helpful type of guy, remember? Besides, protecting Lumiose City is kind of my thing. I was gonna ask you anyways, but now it’s more pressing. Please, join Team MZ!” he begged.

Team MZ?” Serena asked incredulously. Not another damn Team! And a Team sunshine boy was on? Oh no, who tricked him!

“Yep! We’re a team dedicated to protecting Lumiose City and all its inhabitants,” Urbain announced grandly. “I’m the team leader. There’s only a few other members, and we’re based out of Hotel Z.”

“Don’t be stupid, you’ll only get hurt if you stick with that.” Serena didn’t want him to head down that road. Protection was a nice goal, but it would involve him sticking his nose into things he shouldn’t. It would only jeopardize his safety.

“What, and you won’t?” he challenged heatedly. “You might be a super strong Trainer, but you’re still at just as much risk! Let us help you.”

Serena shook her head. “Why would you– you’re putting yourself in a lot of danger here! This is not your fight!” Serena vehemently rejected.

“But it is my fight – it’s all of our fights,” Urbain asserted, resolute. “We live here in Lumiose too. This is our city. It’s our responsibility to take care of it.”

‘No, it isn’t! IT’S MINE! It’s my responsibility to protect you, and I FAILED!’ she wanted to scream at him, but forced herself to be silent. Serena couldn’t say that to someone who looked at her like she meant something and trusted her as a Champion.

Capitalizing on her hesitance, Urbain slyly said, “If you say no, we’re just gonna follow you around anyways. And after your reunion with AZ last night, I know there’s no way you’d leave Hotel Z to avoid me. So either way, if Lumiose’s safety is at risk, we’re getting involved and helping.”

Floette delicately placed her hand on Serena’s face, looked her in the eyes, and nodded. Floette understood what Serena was feeling, and silently offered her approval. It wouldn’t be like last time.

‘It would be okay,’ Serena assured herself. She’d protect them. Serena could. She could.

There would never be another body crushed under the rubble again.

“…if you start calling me “grunt,” I will punch you,” Serena mumbled reluctantly.

Urbain chuckled. “Noted.” He jumped up out of the chair and pumped his fist in the air. “I’m so thrilled, I’m getting goosebumps! Thank you. This means a ton! Welcome to Team MZ. We’re lucky to have you.”

“Yes, you are lucky to have me. Can I trust you’ll keep silent about everything I just told you unless you have my approval? This is very strict league business. It’s important you stay quiet.” She really hoped she didn’t make a massive mistake bringing this up to him.

“Absolutely, you can count on me!” he assured her. “With you on our side, we’ll win the Z-A Royale for su– er, um, I guess the Z-A Royale is a bust then? I should drop out too. Shit, that changes everything.”

Serena waved her hand. “No, no, I’m signing up.”

“HUH?!” Urbain exclaimed. “But I thought…”

“No, you’re correct in your thinking. The Z-A Royale is bound to be a farce, and that company is ludicrously corrupt. But since they’re so graciously asking for my presence, who am I to reject their summons?” Serena cackled nefariously at the message on her Rotom Phone.

“Okaaaaay, not gonna lie, I’m a little lost. They’re the bad guys here, right? Why are you doing what they want?” Urbain really wasn’t the multi-level planning thinking ten moves ahead of your opponent kind of guy. He was the “gut reaction, act first, and deal with it later” type. It’s why he sucked at chess.

“It will be even easier to take them down by joining.” Serena smirked, a fire in her eyes. “They’ve practically presented their own demise on a golden platter for me. How kind of them.”

Urbain resigned that he probably wouldn’t fully understand what she was talking about until he thought about it a lot more. And probably had several more explanations. Urbain wasn’t stupid by any means, but this was scheming at a level that was a little above his usual pay grade.

“Still not really following, so you’ll have to fill the team and I in on the full plan later. Lemme see your Rotom Phone for a sec, and I’ll set up the app for you!” Urbain offered. Serena handed over her phone. “I can put in my contact info while I’m at it.”

‘Yes! Phone number secured! Very smooth, Urbain!’ he celebrated in his head.

*Installing… Z-A Royale app successfully installed.*

“Okay, the app’s ready. Let’s get you all signed up in the Z-A Royale. And we gotta make sure you’ve got the Team MZ look in your profile pic! Here you go – your official Team MZ gear.” Urbain took out a green and black Team MZ jacket and handed it to her. “Proof that you’re one of us!” He thought the jacket looked pretty snazzy!

Serena eyed the jacket in her hands hesitantly. “I said I’d join your team, not that I’d make it my whole personality.” Upon seeing Urbain’s crestfallen look, Serena quickly rephrased, “I appreciate the gesture and will keep the jacket, but I’m not wearing it during my time here. Announcing to the tournament that I’m in Team MZ doesn’t really do anything for us. There’s a much… bigger statement I’m making with this current outfit, and I won’t jeopardize that to wear a team jacket.”

Urbain winced. “Not gonna lie, that stings. I guess I’ll just have to find some other way to stamp my claim on you.”

Serena blinked. “…Excuse me?” He did not just say what she thought he did!

“I MEAN– um, the TEAM’S CLAIM! Sorry!” Urbain sputtered feverishly, his face red. “Can’t have the Battle Connoisseurs or anyone else thinking they can recruit you, right? I think I’m still in shock from the previous revelation! Don’t think about it too much,” he deflected terribly. “And anyways, you look beautiful– I mean, your outfit looks great! Yeah, that! It would be a shame to cover it up! You’re sooooo right! What was I even thinking about with the jacket? Hahahahaha!!” Jeez! SO not smooth, Urbain!

“F-f-f-f-f-flo!” Floette laughed hysterically.

“Uh-huh. Sure,” Serena deadpanned, not at all impressed by his lackluster recovery.

He deflated. There really wasn’t a way to recover from that one. “I’ll just shut up now and take your profile photo.”

“Good idea. I have an idea for a photo in mind.” It was time to teach Urbain a thing or two about production value. “Sensei, Gattaca, Cheshire come on out!” She tossed their Pokeballs, and the three emerged. “Okay, the goal here guys is to make an uber girly and as unintimidating of a photo as possible!”

Urbain faltered. “Wait, what? Shouldn’t you try to–”

“Shush, you,” Serena demurred. “What happened to shutting up?”

“Right! Shutting up now.”

Cheshire, her adorable perfect cuddly giant teddy-bear of a Gengar who could do no wrong peered up curiously at her. “Geng?”

“We’re doing a prank!” Serena delightedly informed him. No, she did not play favorites among her Pokemon.

“Gen, gengar!!” Cheshire rubbed his little grubby hands together and chuckled maliciously, his Glasgow grin stretching wider across his face until it was distortedly ear to ear.

“Cheshire, you’re on effects!” Serena assigned. “I want you to float from above and drop flowers on us. Dazzling Gleam from behind too, of course.”

“Gen!” Cheshire acknowledged. He floated through the wall of the lobby, going outside to wander around and pick flowers.

“Sensei, you’re on lighting!” she directed. “You’re going to use your Water Shuriken and hold them in your hands to make lenses that catch the sunlight. Emphasis on bounce and fill lights! We want soft lighting.”

“Gre!” It wasn’t the first time Sensei had been assigned this job, so he knew what to do.

“And finally, Gattaca.” Serena gave her a reluctant assessing look. “You’re the most… conventionally cute out of the team.”

Gattaca snorted. “Syl, Sylveon!” She was the cutest! Gattaca might not actually want to be cute, but she better be after all the shit she went through!

Serena rolled eyes and waved her off. “Don’t kid yourself, that’s obviously Cheshire. But you are the most unintimidating.”

“VEE! Veon! Syl!” Gattaca stormed, insulted.

“You have no right to complain. Let’s not forget that this,” she gestured to all of Sylveon, “was your choice. So you get the honor of being in the photo with me. Really show off your unintimidating adorable self by jumping in my arms and cuddling with me lovingly as you wrap your ribbons around me.”

Gattaca was probably the only Sylveon out there who evolved into one because she wanted to spite her Trainer out of an Umbreon and accomplished that by loving her too much so Serena would end up with the exact opposite, a Fairy-type. Gattaca loved her trainer, obviously, she was clearly a Sylveon, but it was love motivated by long-game petty revenge.

“Vee,” Gattaca scoffed. She wasn’t doing that! She was fierce! NO!

“You’re going to look adorable, and you’re going to be happy about it!” Serena berated her. She was still a little miffed about the whole Cleffa thing.

Gattaca clicked her tongue and stubbornly looked off to the side.

“…I’ll give you four PokePuffs,” Serena relented, knowing exactly what her Sylveon actually was aiming for here.

“Syl~!” Gattaca chimed happily, now fully on board to do the photo.

“Gen~gar!” Cheshire floated back through the wall doing a cartwheel, flowers in hand.

Serena lit up. “That’s perfect! Great job, Cheshire! I knew I could count on you unlike someone.” She side eyed Gattaca.

“Vee,” Gattaca made a noise of discontent.

“Five PokePuffs,” Serena said blandly.

“Vee~!”

“We’re good to go. Urbain, are you ready to take the picture?” She turned to him. “Make sure it’s a medium close-up. So waist and above, and try to fill the frame as best you can with the two of us. Not a lot of head space, and center us in the frame.”

“Huh?” Urbain snapped out of his daze watching her direct her Pokemon. “I mean, yeah, got it! Medium close-up it is! Sorry, watching you with your Pokemon is kinda great!” He took out his Rotom Phone.

“Places everyone!” Serena clapped. “On your signal, Urbain.”

Urbain called out, “Lights, camera, action!”

*SNAP*

“Looks great!” He admired the photo. “I’ll send it over so you can finish signing up!”

Serena grinned mischievously upon seeing the photo Urbain texted her. It was stupidly adorable, wholesome, and with way too much joyous emotion – It really made her look like a massive ditz who loved Fairy-types. It was everything Serena was not.

It was perfect!

She returned her Pokemon to their Pokeballs, completed the Z-A Royale profile, and hit submit. The notification popped up: *You have now officially entered the Z-A Royale!*

Urbain couldn’t wait to see her seriously battle live and in person! “There you go – all set! Like it shows, you start out at Rank Z. And your goal is to climb from the bottom all the way to Rank A at the top,” he informed her.

If Urbain set the photo he took of Serena as his phone background, no one needed to know.

AZ walked over slowly. “How nice it is to see so much energy so… early in the day.” You never expect to be hit with AZ’s sarcasm, but he saved it for when it was the most opportune moment.

“Yes, good morning, AZ,” Serena bantered.

“Good morning,” AZ joked back. “I could not help overhearing earlier. It puts my mind at ease to know that you will join the Z-A Royale, Serena.” He closed his eyes, deeply feeling the city’s pain. “Lumiose bustles today with Pokemon and people, but beneath the surface lurks a terrible grief. I hope you will claim victory in the Z-A Royale… so we might free Lumiose at last.”

“Not “might,” will,” Serena refuted. “We will free Lumiose, AZ.” She wouldn’t accept anything less.

AZ’s expression softened. “To that end, you should explore the city day and night. Get to re-know her Pokemon and her people. Such bonds will be sure to help you.”

AZ had clearly heard her and Urbain’s conversation earlier. He was telling her not to reject Team MZ and to let people help her. She didn’t have to go it alone. While that was reassuring, it didn’t change the fact that Serena felt responsible for this entire debacle. She’d maybe accept some help, but it was still her mess to clean up.

“AZ’s right!” Urbain chimed in. “I think Lumiose’s future will be a lot more secure with you in it.” And he was back to his usual charm.

“Flooo!” Floette agreed with a twirl.

“And don’t worry,” Urbain continued. “I’ll help you get readapted to the city! The number-one thing a Trainer in Lumiose nowadays should know is… how to roll!”

“You don’t get to be Champion without knowing how to roll. I’ve done more than my fair share of dodging.” Serena didn’t even want to think about the sheer number of near death situations she’d been in over the years.

Urbain eyed her skirt. “…Can you roll in a miniskirt?”

Serena raised an eye brow. “Yes.” Urbain seemed oblivious to her judgement and continued to stare at her skirt.

The elevator dinged. Lida walked out and immediately criticized, “Urbain, could you turn it down, like two notches?” She turned on a dime to look at AZ. “Can’t you shush ‘em, AZ? Yell at ‘em a little?”

“It would be unseemly for me to shout and scold… especially since I have been enjoying their antics,” AZ muffled a laugh. “Team MZ’s new member would be more likely to scold me if I even tried to shout at her.”

“NEW MEMBER?!” Lida screeched. No way!! A new member!

Urbain snickered. “Weren’t you just complaining about me being loud, Lida?” he mocked.

Lida shook her head, and turned to the apparent new member. “Fair, sor– wait, Serena?!”

“Lida?” Serena marveled. “Oh my gosh, it’s been years! How are you?” The last time she saw Lida was before Serena departed for Hoenn. They’d grabbed coffee and gossiped about Tierno.

“Much better now,” Lida breathed. “Honestly, we have so much to get caught up on. Don’t even get me started on Tierno…” she trailed off, not even sure where to begin on that front.

Noticing her internal discord, Serena jumped in, “Girls night?”

Lida brightened. “Yes!! Most definitely!!”

Urbain laughed. “You already know half the team! See? You were meant to join!”

“Serena, how the hell did this idiot,” Lida jabbed her thumb at Urbain, “convince you of all people to join our team?”

“Wow, love the support for your team leader, Lida,” Urbain jeered bluntly.

“Well, he actually threatened to stalk me indefinitely if I didn’t join,” Serena answered casually.

Urbain jolted. “WAIT!!”

Lida, disappointed, but not surprised, leveled a stink eye at Urbain. “Really?”

Serena nodded, then continued to fill Lida in on the tale, “And then he tried to force me to wear a team jacket so he could stake his claim on me.”

“I SAID I DIDN’T MEAN IT LIKE THAT!!” Urbain was completely red, his face matched the tips of his hair.

Lida, now uber-disappointed, glared at Urbain. “Is that so?” she said flatly.

Oh, she sees how it is. Urbain had a budding crush on Serena, but Urbain most definitely put his foot in his mouth several times. Because of course he would. It was Urbain. His lines were either accidentally incredibly smooth or a total train wreck. But still, “staking his claim”? Really, Urbain? Arceus, this was just the start, wasn’t it? Urbain was going to be even more insufferable and cringy now that he had a crush.

To be fair, Lida super understood Urbain on this one, because same. Serena had been her first crush once upon a time. When Tierno first introduced Serena to her all those years ago, Lida had gotten swept up in how fun and bright she was. Lida had since gotten over it, it was never anything more than an innocent puppy crush, but she would always be a little dazzled by Serena. Now, Serena was like the cool older sister she always wished she had. She was a confidant filled with advice and experience Lida desperately needed right now.

And Lida finally had someone to gossip with again! Especially about the two numbskulls in Team MZ. Ugh, they could be so exhausting.

“I MEANT THE TEAM’S CLAIM!! SO SHE WOULDN’T GET POACHED BY OTHER GROUPS!” he attempted to explain.

“Uh-huh, sure you did.” Lida shook her head, and sighed. “Arceus, I’m so glad you’re here, Serena. Now I don’t have to suffer through listening to this mess,” she waved her hand at Urbain, “alone anymore.”

“LIDA!”

“It must have been so painful.” Serena reassuringly hugged her. “Don’t worry, I’m here now. We can make fun of him and talk about him behind his back together all we want.”

“HEY!”

The two girls erupted into giggles.

“What were you two even doing down here anyways?” Lida questioned, still shaking off the giggles.

Serena adjusted her hat. “Urbain was helping me register for the Z-A Royale.”

“You’re going to join?!” Lida raised her hand to cover her mouth in shock. “Wait, is that even allowed?”

“It’s more than allowed, seeing as Quasartico themselves extended an invitation to me,” Serena provided. Oh, they would soon come to rue the day they did!

“We’ve got the Team MZ win in the bag!” Lida rejoiced. “You’ll decimate your opponents easily!” She made fierce punching motions in the air.

“Right!” Urbain agreed, his face considerably less red. “Let's scope out the next potential battle zone!”

“Not so fast.” Serena wanted to nip that line of thinking in the bud. “Look, if I’m doing this for real, then it’s not good sportsmanship if I use my Champion team. It would be a PR nightmare if the media found out!” She had to make herself look perfect to the media if her plan was going to work.

Urbain rubbed the back of his head. “You’re right, I got a little ahead of myself there.”

“Eeehhh??” Lida exclaimed in disbelief. “Don’t tell me you’re going to start all over again!”

Sensei emerged from his Pokeball on his own, looking disturbed and upset. This is new information to him!!

“I’m not benching you permanently, Sensei.” Her Greninja could be such a big baby sometimes! “But even beating up new trainers gets old after a while, you have to admit.”

“Nin,” Sensei pouted, refusing to agree, and determinedly did not make eye contact.

“Fine.” Serena gave in much too easily. She could never say no to him. “What if I keep you in the party, but you don’t get to fight until the more serious trainers appear.” Sensei perked up a little at that.

“So let’s go to the wild zone just down the street!” Urbain suggested. She could catch some new Pokemon there!

Serena shook her head, eyes gleaming. “No, I have somewhere much more fitting in mind.”

“Oh no…” Lida mumbled under her breath, grimacing. She knew where that was going.

“Oh, where? Do you have some secret Champion knowledge?” he probed. If there was insider info, Urbain wanted to know about it!

“The cemetery!” Serena beamed, looking so happy at the thought that she was actually sparkling.

Urbain scrunched his eyebrows, confused. “The cemetery…?” Sensei patted Urbain’s shoulder sympathetically.

Defeated, Lida hung her head. “Of course you want to go to the cemetery.”

“Yes! This is an excellent chance to train some Pokemon I’ve always wanted to add to the team, but never could because my other Pokemon refused to let me switch them out! Ha-ha!” Her team were such possessive little miscreants! They never allowed her to switch them out of the main party.

“Er, but you just let Greninja– sorry, Sensei stay on the team? Won’t they protest too?” Urbain questioned.

Serena smirked victoriously. “Oh, they will, but Sensei has seniority as my first ever Pokemon. They can pout all they want, but Sensei is an exception that they can’t deny!”

Sensei nodded in agreement. Yes, he was better than them.

“Besides,” Serena lovingly pet Sensei’s head. “Sensei, even back when he was a Froakie, acted like a know-it-all wise old man who's been through many perilous wars. He tries to corral the rest of the team and teach them things as if being on the team 2 weeks longer than them had somehow given him secret elite knowledge and it was his duty to impart it to them. The rest of the team won’t deny Sensei the chance to be a sensei for real.” No, they’d laugh hysterically at him and revel in it.

The Greninja squawked, the rug pulled out from under him. Don’t make him look stupid!!

Serena beamed at him. “Sensei, you can finally live up to your dreams and help me train up your new teammates!”

Sensei croaked, suddenly placated. Yeah, he did want to teach some younglings while showing off how much better than them he was.

“But still, why the cemetery?” Urbain pressed.

Lida cringed, and hid her face in her hands. She knew exactly what that response was going to be. No doubt the same answer Serena gave when Lida asked her the same thing years ago.

“Because Ghost and Dark-types are just the cutest!!” Serena clasped her hands together in front of her and sighed dreamily. “I’ve always wanted an Aegislash! They’re so noble and regal! And a Zoroark! They’re sooo adorable and fluffy!”

“To each their own, I guess?” Suddenly, her team composition made a lot more sense to Urbain.

Honestly, Serena never really understood why people were so confused when they learned she was a Ghost and Dark-type specialist. Just because Serena preferred colors, glitz, and glamor and didn’t dress like a Hex Maniac or have a goth aesthetic didn’t mean she couldn’t specialize in Ghost and Dark-types.

Serena related to them more than any other type – the maximum drama, the sob stories, the balance between working in the shadows and the spotlight, the childish whimsy, the plight of the misunderstood, the unyielding desire to make chaos for the fun of it happen, and the undeniable will to thrive despite lofty trauma.

Ghost-types were flashy, they wanted attention, drama, and laughter. They wanted to cause problems and enjoy the fall out.

Ghost Pokemon came back from the dead. They wanted to live and enjoy the simple things in life regardless of the terrible circumstances that begot their death. Ghost Pokemon loved life more than any other. Reducing them to solely being an incantation of death as most did was wrong, they represented the continuing cycle of the world and rebirth.

Ghost Pokemon were the bridge between life and death, between destruction and creation.

Dark-types were similarly outcast. They also carried stigma, many believing Dark-types were evil and nefarious in nature. It wasn’t true, and raised the question of did Dark-types retreat to the darkness and adopt their careful characteristics because they were shunned, or did their hyper-vigilance make them at home in the shadows? Dark-types lived on the fringe of society, often misunderstood and mischaracterized. They recognized the need to work in the shadows and when to step into the spotlight.

Dark-types saw the balance of conflict, the reciprocal nature of “good” and “bad,” and carefully traversed it. The stronger the light, the darker the shadow, and one can’t exist without the other.

Serena resonated with them both very much, and in turn, they thrived on her subtle chaos melodrama agenda.

It took a very special kind of person to look at Yveltal, the hulking giant death god of a bird, and think he’s absolutely adorable and just a little misunderstood guy! She adorned him with bows and ribbons. There was a reason why Lemis stuck around and was completely content with being a part of Serena’s team.

“Before we get to the cemetery though, I’d like to stop by a Pokemon Center.” Serena was not at all looking forward to the Pokemon Center visit, but it couldn’t be helped. She had to stock up on items, especially if she was training new Pokemon.

“Alright!” Urbain quickly assessed his mental map. “There’s a Pokemon Center just around the corner.” Urbain darted out the door.

“Will you be coming, Lida?” Serena asked. “I have these wonderful glasses that are an incredible disguise. No one will hound us.” Serena took out the glasses from her tote and put them on.

“Nope! You two have fun in the cemetery. I’m totally okay not joining you on this one!” Lida waved her hands in front of her with a slightly alert look, then quickly sat down in one of the lobby’s chairs. “Go ahead, really! I’m good!” Lida did NOT like ghosts! Nope! She was a beach and ocean girl, not a cemetery girl!!

Also, Lida had no interest in third wheeling on Serena and Urbain’s absolutely insane cemetery pseudo first date! Lida had to give Urbain props for not being scared off by the “I love dead and creepy shit” thing Serena had going on.

“Alright, your loss.” Lumiose’s graveyard was beautiful after all. It has some very stunning crypts and effigies. Not to mention the most gorgeous mausoleum Serena had ever seen. It was a work of art! After exploring it many times, Serena had actually found a hidden entrance to the sealed off Lumiose catacombs! Once Serena ensured she wouldn’t get lost forever down there, she fully intended to explore it! Imagine what ghosties must have made homes there!

Serena skipped out the door, head flooded with dreams of perfect new team additions. Eeee! She couldn’t wait!

“Well, this is a problem... What do you think is the deal here, Serena?” Urbain stared in disbelief at the huge rocks blocking the street in front of him.

“Do any of your Pokemon happen to know Rock Smash?” Serena sighed. None of hers did, and she really didn’t want to change their move sets.

“Nope! But there’s no way the Hotel will get any guests with these boulders in the way. Oh well, I know a special route, follow me!” He ran around the corner and climbed up a ladder on the side of a nearby building.

Serena climbed after him. “Ugh, how can you be so chipper about visiting a Pokemon Center?”

Urbain hopped up onto the roof. “Pokemon Centers are the best! You can’t diss free health care for Pokemon!” He reached out his hand and helped Serena up after him.

“Arceus, I envy you,” Serena bemoaned as she dusted off her skirt. “Pokemon Center nurses have decided they all hate me for no reason.”

“‘Cmon, it can’t be that bad. I’m sure you’re exaggerating.” Urbain had quickly picked up on the fact that Serena was very dramatic and reveled in it. He jumped down from terrace to terrace until he landed on the street below. Serena jumped alongside him with no hesitation. “Obviously, that’s a one-way route, so we’ll find another way back,” Urbain noted, but he could figure that out later. “Now we’re almost to our goal! Let’s head to the Pokemon Center!”

“I’m definitely not exaggerating,” she asserted. “They hate me. It’s such a hassle to go to the Pokemon Center because of it. I’m hopeful that this time will be different.” Serena clenched her hand into a fist and determinedly stared at the Pokemon Center in the distance. “I have my glasses after all, there’s a chance they won’t recognize me!” Serena marched into the Pokemon Center.

“Enchantée! Is this your first visit to a Pokemon Center in this city?” the nurse asked.

‘Damn, these glasses are putting in work!! Maybe the attendant will finally be nice to me!’ She was delighted!

“It’s not my first visit, but it is my first time here in five years,” Serena answered lightly, carefully trying not to piss off the nurse.

“Five years? Oh, my, so much has changed in five years. Why, you must be overwhelmed with how much has happened since you’ve been gone,” the lady noted with thinly veiled sarcasm that did not at all match her bright “Pokemon Center” attendee smile.

No! Serena’s hopes of having a normal Pokemon Center visit for once were dust in the wind. She absolutely recognized her!

“Might I also recommend that you install the Pokedex app on your phone? There’s a promotion underway right now – if you catch five Pokemon species and register them in your Pokedex, there’s a prize in it for you! Alors – how about it? Ready to install the Pokedex app?” The woman’s eyes gleamed.

Serena cursed, she clearly was trying to cause a problem for her, but Serena hadn’t figured out her angle yet.

Serena dug into her tote and pulled out her Pokedex. She held it up to the nurse. “Are these being discontinued?”

“Oh my! That’s practically an antique!” she commented haughty, raising a hand to her chin and looking down at Serena.

Serena’s eye brow twitched. “Is there backwards compatibility?”

“Nope! Why would there be?” the nurse declared gleefully with a mocking grin. “There’s no need to service something so,” she looked Serena up and down, “outdated.”

A vein bulged on Serena’s forehead. The Pokemon Center nurses were always SO passive aggressive with her! WHY?! What the hell did Serena do to turn every Pokemon Center nurse against her! She wanted to know!

It’s not like it could have been the policies Serena supported, she was pro-union! But this began way before she was Champion and all the way back at the start of her journey! Did something about Serena just scream “nurses please hate me”?

“Fine, I’ll download the Pokedex app,” Serena forced out through gritted teeth and a fake smile. How dare this nurse make all of her Pokedex progress, years of work, worthless!!!

“Wonderful!” The nurse's grin was so so self-satisfied. Serena could tell the attendant knew exactly what she did and probably couldn’t wait to brag about it to the other nurses! “Thank you very much for downloading the new Pokedex app! Once you catch five different species of Pokemon and register them in your Pokedex, please report your success to the Pokemon Research Lab.”

Oh, Serena was NOT going to let this stupid woman pull one over on her. She’d be reporting to the Lab alright, and she’d FORCE them to port over her Pokedex! Did Serena really care about the Pokedex? No. But fuck this lady! Serena wasn’t going to let her win!

“Great, sure, thanks so much!” Serena tried to make her sarcasm as overt as possible. If the nurse was going to be a bitch, she’d be a bitch right back. “Now that the unwilling disturbance is over, can I please buy some items?” Serena fluttered her lashes and widened her grin.

The nurse narrowed her eyes ever so slightly, but never dropped her smile. “Yes, of course you can! Here’s our selection.”

A holographic screen popped up displaying the current inventory. Serena scrolled through the items, but quickly noticed that there were a lot missing. This was just the bare minimum! Just potions, Pokeballs, status heals. No Ultra Balls, max revives, or vitamins?

“I really hate to be a bother,” Serena started with absolutely no sincerity and the widest fakest smile, “but your selection seems rather limited. Are you sure you didn’t make an error on your end?”

“There’s been no error, this is what’s available to you,” the employee chirped.

Serena clicked her tongue, but kept her grin strong. She would not be out done by this woman! “I have 8 Gym Badges, I should be able to see the full selection of Pokemon Center offerings.”

“Yes, this is the full selection of what’s available to you,” the nurse emphasized, her smile sharpening ever so slightly into a smirk.

Serena’s smile turned rigid, and she held herself back from snapping at her that she wasn’t even a real nurse anyways! Pokemon Center employees that worked at mini-centers like this were just attendants, not actual nurses! You didn’t need a medical license to operate the healing machine! An idiot could do it!

This lady was no better than a superficial decoration!

And to think, Serena still advocated for this woman’s rights to be paid a fair wage!!

“I see,” Serena quipped, beaming. “I’ll take 20 Pokeballs, 30 potions, and 5 of each of the heals… Please.”

The woman’s eyes widened in shock and brought her hand up to cover her mouth. “Oh my, that’s quite a lot, are you sure you can afford that?”

Serena laughed the fakest laugh she’d ever made. “Yes, I’m sure.” Serena scrunched her nose and smiled so pinched that it looked like she might be in pain. “You’re just so good at your job for checking.”

From off to the side and completely out of notice of the two women who were very much locked in on each other, Urbain had long since covered his mouth with both of his hands and had to physically restrain himself from bursting out laughing.

The nurse really did hate Serena for no reason! What the hell! She started making digs at her from the second she laid eyes on Serena. He’d never seen a Pokemon Center nurse act anything like this before!

“Thank you for noticing,” she brushed her pink bangs out of her face and readjusted her nurse cap. “I actually won Employee of The Year.”

Serena’s eye twitched. “Wow, I can see why! You’re just so great! Can I check out now? Please?” she urged. She wanted to be DONE!!

“Absolutely! Let me gather your items!” She turned around with an empty tray to gather Serena’s purchase.

“Thank you!”

“Oh no,” the nurse started, sounding like she was crooning at a dog, turning back around with a tray full of items and setting it on the counter. “Looks like we are all out of all of our heals except Burn Heals! We also only had 8 potions and 10 Pokeballs in stock! Whoopsie!” She jokingly knocked her fist against her head. “Looks like I must have counted our stock wrong this morning.”

“That’s not very Employee of The Year of you,” Serena snarked. The nurse chose to ignore her and rang up the items.

“You’ll find your total here. Please tap your Rotom Phone to pay.” The woman gestured at the reader. Serena tapped her phone, stuffed her items in her tote bag, and stormed over to where Urbain was standing nearby.

By the look on Urbain’s face and the muffled chuckle he let out, Serena could tell he now fully understood her plight.

“Just one sec, I want to see something.” Urbain walked over to the counter.

“Enchantée! Welcome to the Pokemon Center!” the nurse greeted him merrily.

“Thanks! Can I buy one Ice Heal please?” Urbain asked with an easy smile.

“Of course! Just one moment.” She pulled an Ice Heal out from and set it on the counter. “Will that be all? We have many more heals in stock.”

Serena squawked in outrage.

Urbain’s lip twitched, finding it even harder to prevent himself from laughing. “Yeah, that’s it for me, thanks.” He quickly paid, grabbed the Ice Heal, and ran out of the Pokemon Center. Once he was out of earshot, he collapsed laughing, holding the wall to prevent him from falling onto the floor.

Serena joined him, but didn’t look at all amused. “See?!” she huffed. “They hate me!! I did NOTHING to them!!”

Urbain only laughed harder. Serena crossed her arms and tapped her foot as she waited for him to stop laughing.

“It’s nice of them to offer a prize. Good motivation to get you catching Pokemon!” Urbain snickered.

“Ha, ha, very funny,” Serena gibed, not at all impressed. “Why don’t you try being on the receiving end of that for five years and then tell me how funny you think it is!!”

“No, that would suck immensely,” Urbain admitted playfully. “Now, let’s head to that cemetery."

“Hold on, change of plans, I’ll be reporting to the Lab immediately. One of them is going to port my Dex over. Or so help me…” Serena grumbled, not bothering to finish her threat.

Urbain chuckled. He wished her well in her noble quest to one up the Pokemon Center nurse. He checked his phone, then winced. Yikes. He was about to ruin Serena’s very short lived day even further. “Soooo, “immediately” is gonna be a little hard. We’re gonna have to go tomorrow.”

“No! We are going now!” Serena spat, rounding on him.

Urbain held his hands up in surrender. “Well, the Lab closed about 30 minutes ago.”

“...What?” she said slowly, voice frigid. Serena was at the end of her rope and looked like if you poked her wrong she’d lash out and hit you.

“Hey, don’t shoot the messenger,” Urbain tried to redirect her ire to anything other than himself. “On the bright side though, if we start walking now, we’ll get to the cemetery just after nightfall!” That should cheer her up, right? She seemed really into the cemetery after all.

“I guess that is good.” Fine. Serena would just have to go to the Lab tomorrow and badger them until they agreed to port her Dex. “We’re wasting daylight then complaining about it.”

Urbain snorted. She was complaining about it, not “we.” Though he didn’t bother to point that out to her.

During their walk through the city, Serena continued to disdainfully note the ugly scaffolding that now littered the streets.

Urbain was quick to point out relevant landmarks like a helpful tour guide. He tried to stick to things that were new additions or changes in the past few years, but he slipped up a few times and looked rightfully embarrassed like when he tried to explain what Prism Tower was.

Eventually, they passed by a wild zone. Wild zone 3, or as Serena liked to call it, the hellscape that once was the opulently beautiful Rouge Plaza.

“So this is a wild zone.” Serena was disappointed to realize that it was just as ugly as everything else Quasartico produced.

“Wherever you see that green light, it’s marking the boundaries of a wild zone,” Urbain explained as they passed by. “We keep getting more wild Pokemon in Lumiose, so wild zones were Quasartico’s solution to that.”

“They most definitely do NOT have permission from the league to use those specific entry pillars! I did not approve of that! They’re for Gyms only,” Serena fumed. Was everything Quasartico did designed specifically to spit in Serena’s face? “Has anyone asked why we’re getting more wild Pokemon in Lumiose? If there’s enough Pokemon flooding the city to justify full wide range habitats it’s not normal.”

“No, I don’t think anyone has, but they should be,” he answered seriously. Urbain typically took people at face value, he really wasn’t the skeptical kind of person, nor did he think he’d ever develop that. Urbain would continue to see the good in people first, but this afternoon with Serena was a bit of a wake up call for him. It was a reminder that just because he saw the good in them, didn’t mean they were good.

Though, Urbain was happy to leave the paranoia and franticness to Serena. That was definitely not the kind of person he was. Can’t be helpful if you’re questioning everybody all the time, right?

“I have to do everything myself, don’t I?” Serena groaned, exasperated by the lack of action of all the authority figures in this damned city.

“Well, not everything. Team MZ’s got your back, okay?” Urbain assured her. “We’ll help out with the investigation and see what we can dig up!”

“I appreciate it, but save that confidence until after you’ve proven you can produce results.” Serena wasn’t going to get her hopes up that she had competent help until the track record showed it.

“Ouch, harsh, but fair. Still, you’re giving us a chance.” Urbain’s eyes shined as he looked at her. “We’ll show you that you can rely on us!”

“Don’t let me down then,” Serena gave in, unable to hold strong against his Lillipup eyes.

“We won’t!” Urbain whooped.



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Cheshire (Gengar) – after the Cheshire Cat from Alice in Wonderland.

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The Z-A Royale invitation just SHOWING UP on your phone in the game was so weird! Like?? How did they know your number or who you even are?? HOW DID THEY KNOW? I was honestly creeped out in the game bc wtf. I can’t be the only one who thought this, right? And also the fact that the invite came JUST as Urbain mentioned the player should join?? Bro WHAT?! There’s also a really big theme of surveillance in Z-A. One uber overt example: so many people keep saying, “we’re always watching you,” BUT HOW?! And there’s no payoff? Especially because spyware IS A THING in XY!! It would have been so easy to connect! Don’t worry, I’m connecting the dots!!

Oh, Serena absolutely did do something to earn the Pokemon Center nurses’ ire at the start of her journey.

As a heads up, a LOT of XY content is going to be coming back in this fic!!
 
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Overview Review!!?

Greetings!

Start Notes:
Hello, hello!! I am *very* new to this forum and excited to be here!
Glad to have you!

This intro/overview first post in the thread will be edited heavily as I start understand the layout and such better. I aspire to have a pretty overview post like every other fic on this forum has. You guys have set the bar high, and I will eventually clean this up to hopefully look a fraction as good as some of your's do!
Aww thanks! Good to see you have a good attitude.

This fic is one that I have a few chapters written and posted already on AO3 under the same title, and I'll be posting all of those chapters over here as well!
Good. Will look forward to them!

Feel free to share any and all thoughts you have on the fic! I'm a person that will unashamedly admit I LOVE getting comments on fics and hear reactions, thoughts, feedback, things you enjoyed, etc lol. They never fail to make my day!
I know exactly what you mean.

Hope you enjoy!!
Me too!



International Celebrity Ruins Everything

Legends: Z-A, Pokemon XY
First, I'll say I am pretty much unfamiliar with these games. (Sorry...) I just haven't played many modern mon fics, but that doesn't stop me from making reviews.

Also, these chapters are way longer than I thought they would be, but I won't back down! I plan to get that review in for you. (Oh and this 'review' here doesn't count. I just thought it was good manners to get a review in here for your intro and to make you feel good to anticipate a review from me later.)

Also, I'm pretty much going in blind on this but I'm reading over the stuff here in the intro first.

Summary:

At 13, Serena became the Kalos League Champion, rocketing her into stardom, fame, and glory.
Odd thing about accomplishing so much so young is that one wonders what exactly they should do after that. The protagonist of my fic is also a Champion at the start of the fic! Neat to see someone else do a similar thing.

Unable to settle down permanently in Kalos just yet, possibly (probably) due to trauma, Serena heads to Hoenn under the guise of studying the origins of Mega Evolution, only briefly returning to Kalos to handle Champion affairs when absolutely needed.
So she sort of moved to Hoenn as a vacation thing? I guess it's more of a trauma avoidance thing.

Five years later, after seeing a very odd promotional video for Hotel Z, Serena is stunned. AZ, the 3,000-year-old giant homeless senile war criminal who interrupted her Champion parade, owned a HOTEL?! Serena decides that a stay in Lumiose is in order immediately. What was supposed to be a drop-in visit quickly spirals into another massive undertaking, featuring a wide array of new and fun colorful megalomaniacs, and training a brand new team.
Not quite sure what to make of all this, but it sounds exciting! :quag:

At least this time, it was just the fate of Lumiose on the line, not the destruction of the entire world and every life form on it. Small victories.
Huh. Should be interesting to see how/why she should train a new team when the stakes demand her to use her old/better team otherwise it will be:

"Oh no the city is on fire! Help!" :wowzard:

"Don't worry, I'll use my new weaker team and do my best!" :okgon:
"Wait, WHAT?! People are getting killed and you want to use your new team instead of your better one?!" :wowzard:

"Well, yeah! World ending threats happen all the time in this crazy world. A girl's got to get experience for her new team somewhere...":unquag:
:mewlulz: I'm mostly just amusing myself here. Should be interesting to see how you make sense of it.

I guess this is going to be my weekly bonus for week 1! 12k is a ton, but I hope my willingness to review such a large chapter will be well-received. (Best way to thank me would be with reviews for my fic! 😉)
 

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A More Beautiful Lumiose

Chapter 1
So, I kind of jumped the gun and agreed to review this for blitz before I realized how absurdly large these chapters are... 12k is waaay higher than I would normally go for. But you know what? I stand by my words! REVIEW GO!!! :letsgorb:

For blitz, I only need to provide 250 words for a review, but I'm not going to do that to you. Screw the points! You are going to get a proper review from me! :okgon:

Total review word count: 2335 words

“...No order is too tall when you have our esteemed owner at the helm! Choose Hotel Z for your next stay in Lumiose!”
Being a giant makes sense for the slogan! :mewlulz:

“Hotel Z is the best hotel in Lumiose! No order is too tall when…”

“Hotel Z is the…”

“Hotel Z…”


Serena let the video that had randomly popped up on her feed loop continuously, unable to tear her eyes away as she failed to comprehend what she was seeing.
Ah, nice way of showing the loop! I enjoy the way you worded this bit too.

I can already tell you have some writing skill. Perfect! That should make it easier for me to provide more positive/reactionary comments!

After about the 15th time the video had played, Serena scrambled to check the profile of the poster, nearly dropping her Rotom Phone in the process, and accidentally knocking her coffee cup off the counter. It shattered on the ground, hot coffee and porcelain spattering everywhere, but Serena didn’t even glance at it.
Daaang. That is some FOCUS! :wowzard:

The username was “hotelzlumiose” with the display name “Hotel Z - Lumiose City.” The account had several other short promotional videos, all only racking up single digit views, though one notably stood out for having a whopping 25 views. However, now that Serena thought about it, that was the video she’d been letting play over and over again.
And yet she somehow hears of it when it has such a small view count? That seems too unlikely to be coincidence... 🧐

She promptly watched every other video on the account, eyes glued to the screen. Each video featured an admittedly very cute boy who had light blonde hair with red tips, some shots of the supposed Hotel Z, and a few Pokemon, usually some combination of a Chikorita, Totodile, and Tepig. But sometimes, and most importantly, the videos displayed the toweringly tall owner of said hotel and his Floette.

Serena had to pinch herself to make sure she wasn’t seeing things.

There was no WAY!

The hotel owner, who looked very dapper and put together, dressed nicely in a button-up vest, slacks, and a bowtie with his hair cut, tamed, and arranged in a long braid… was AZ!!

AZ, the 3,000-year-old giant homeless senile war criminal who interrupted her Champion parade, owned a HOTEL?!
Yeah, that seems quite a bit odd!

The AZ Serena had to DRAG into a clothing store to buy bespoke clothes for while he refused to accept anything “too nice” the entire outing and swore he’d never wear a suit.

The AZ who wouldn’t even WALK into a hair salon with Serena and vowed he’d never touch his hair.

The AZ who REFUSED to let Serena purchase him an apartment because he didn’t want to settle down, claiming he was a life long wanderer.

The AZ who, no matter how much Serena begged him before her departure, wouldn’t get a Holo Caster to keep in touch with her, stubbornly declaring that technology was out of his depth.

THAT AZ?!

OWNED A HOTEL?!
I like how you walk through this bit. As someone who has almost no clue what the crap is going on(I did look up some summaries for the games to get a basic understanding), this is all highly useful info!

Serena had to see this for herself in person. Because there was NO WAY she’d accept that this was real until she saw it with her own two eyes.

She’d stayed away from Kalos, as far away from Lumiose as possible in the last five years, but this was more than worth breaking her Lumiose-ban for. Serena immediately bought a ticket to Kalos for the next day.

Now, all she needed was a disguise.
I guess the disguise is so that people don't notice she is a Champion.

Z • ──── ᒡ◯ᵔ◯ᒢ✧ ──── • A​
So this is an interesting line. Glasses (which I assume is supposed to represent a disguise) and it seems like it also signifies scene change or time skip. If so, it's the most unique I've seen! Very clever.

Urbain’s Rotom Phone popped out of his pocket and floated in front of him. “Okay, ready to record! Now all we need is a tourist fresh off the train. Hope you three are ready for the spotlight again!”

Chikorita, Totodile, and Tepig all made noises of agreement. They were more than ready for the spotlight! They were born ready! They wanted to be stars as much as the actual stars hung in the sky above!

“If we’re gonna protect Lumiose, we’ll need a bigger team!” Urbain resolved. “So let’s keep spreading the word about how great Hotel Z is. And once we get a guest who has what it takes, we’ll recruit ‘em to the cause! Now we need someone with a real “I’m a tourist” look.” Urbain watched the crowd of people exit the station, and that’s when he caught sight of her.
Hmmm... I wonder what is going on...

There was a girl who appeared to be about his age. She doesn’t look exactly like a tourist per se, but she didn’t fit in at all with the people around her. She stood out, and caught Urbain’s eye immediately. She was practically sparkling with how put together she was. She wore a long open tan trench coat, a short red plaid dress, knee-high heeled brown boots, and a maroon felt hat. Her long, honey-colored hair was tied in pigtails and her blue-gray eyes were tucked behind a pair of slightly cat-eyed rounded tortoiseshell glasses.

Something tickled in the back of Urbain’s head that she didn’t look quite right with glasses, but he waved it off. She was very fashionable and beautiful, sure, but there’s also something magnetic about her that’s drawing him in, and if Urbain thought that, the camera would think that too!
This seems to be the start of whatever shenanigans this is going to turn into...

Plus, she did have a rather huge old-fashioned travel bag that did seem very touristy on its own. However, the overly large leather bag didn’t even look out of place at her side. She somehow made it work perfectly with her look.

“Hey, you there!” Urbain called out to her. Attention successfully caught, she looked a bit startled at being singled out. Oops! He shouldn't have been so loud.
She thought the cat was out of the bag already! :unquag:

Getting randomly screamed at in a crowd was bound to make anyone uncomfortable. Urbain walked over to her. “Just pulled into the Gare de Lumiose, am I right?” he asked lightly, with an easy smile, trying to compensate for the shock he’d given her. Urbain really wanted her to be in the promo video, so hopefully he hadn’t scared her off.

It seemed like his worries had been unfounded because her alertness melted away and her eyes widened slightly in recognition. “Oh, hey! You’re the guy from the video!” she identified.

“Y-you saw the video?!” Despite the multitude of videos Urbain had put out, being recognized on the street like this had never happened before! He’d always wished it would happen though. It would be proof that his PR ads were working. But it finally happened! And the fact that this really pretty girl was the one who did?!
It's the best day ever for Urbain! :okgon:

“Chika?! Chik, chik!!” Chikorita disbelievingly poked Totodile and Tepig, who were equally as shocked.

“Te, pig.” Tepig muttered, overwhelmed. They were finally reaching the heights of fame they knew they were destined for! All of their secret midnight practices the three of them had while Urbain was sleeping were worth it!
I like how the narration can tell us stuff about multiple characters.

Perhaps I should experiment with such a style for me own fic? 🤔

The girl smiled radiantly. “Yeah! I came back to Lumiose just to stay in Hotel Z because of it.”

Urbain’s heart fluttered, and he couldn’t help himself from impulsive shouting, “REALLY?!” This was one of the best days of Urbain’s life. It wasn’t even that she was planning a trip to Lumiose and happened to see his advertisement. No. She came to Lumiose JUST to stay in Hotel Z because of HIS video!

“TOTODILE?!” Totodile screeched, eyes practically popping out of his head.

“Yes, really,” Serena confirmed playfully, very much enjoying how excited he and his Pokemon were. His joy was contagious. “I couldn’t find anywhere to book online, so I figured I’d just show up. Hopefully you’re not booked…?”

“NO!” he frantically exclaimed, reaching out his hands like he was ready to stop her as if she was about to run away.
This amuses me how happy he is about this. Stuff people work really hard that they get praised for makes me feel good. A little recognition really can go a long way. :okgon:

Urbain coughed to try to cover his blunder and returned his hands to his sides, attempting to somewhat look more casual. “No. We have plenty of room!!” He had to shoot down the idea that she should look anywhere else to stay but Hotel Z!
Oh dear. I wonder what a mess that place actually is. :copyka:

“Hey, actually, I was just about to film another promo video for the hotel, do you want to be in it?”

“Sure, sounds like fun!” Serena loved being on camera, and she was completely okay with endorsing AZ’s hotel de war crimes. The mental image of the towering AZ bumbling about with a flood of guests and struggling to do customer service was too good to pass up on. Serena would absolutely slap her face on whatever ad Hotel Z was putting out.

Score! Urbain really lucked out! “I need you to look into the camera and say, “Hotel Z’s the best stay in Lumiose!” Easy, right?”
Such false advertising lol... :unquag:

Serena tilted her head, confused. “Oh, that’s it? You don’t want to spice up the promo with camera angles and effects? Sparkle cannons are always a good addition. If you don’t have that on hand, Dazzling Gleam works well instead.”

Serena might not be a director, but she’d made enough Trainer PR videos and been in countless brands advertisements and photoshoots to know a little bit about filmmaking and marketing. Serena being in the Hotel Z ad would do wonders on its own, but the video would reach even greater heights with a higher production value to snag viewer attention.
Nice details here on ways to improve an ad video!

Overwhelmed customer service AZ was on the line here!

“Nah,” he waved off her suggestion, “simple is always better! We’re going for authenticity.”

“Alright, if you say so,” Serena agreed, albeit skeptically. “Though, I really do think a Dazzling Gleam behind me would really improve the shot.” If somehow the video didn’t go viral, Serena would step in and find another way to make her very important new dream a reality.

Urbain delightedly laughed, enjoying her clear enthusiasm for his video. “I love the passion, but Hotel Z is good enough to bring in customers without all the bells and whistles. Okay, lights, camera…”
This guy is crazy! :unquag:

Loud music unexpectedly blasted from the nearby billboard, dominating the entire intersection and train station courtyard. The volume ensured that no one would be ignoring it.

Urbain grimaced, energy deflating, and tucked his Rotom Phone away. “Ah, shoot. We can’t film with that ad blaring in the background!”

On screen, the video opened on a middle aged woman with bleached blonde hair in a clean cut work-dress. “Welcome to Lumiose City, where people and Pokemon flourish together. My name is Jett, and I’m the CEO of Quasartico Inc. Pokemon are mysterious…”

Serena was overwhelmed by the unpleasant jarring interruption. “I can’t believe they’re allowing ads to be playing that loud in the streets! It’s ruining the city's atmosphere. What is the new mayor thinking?!”

“I’m guessing you’ve been to Lumiose before, huh?” Urbain observed.

“Oh, yes,” Serena confirmed, trolling through the multitude of memories she had in Lumiose, the good and the bad. “Many, many times. I lived here briefly about 5 years ago.”

Urbain scrunched his eyes in a half-wince, half-smile. “Yeah, the city has changed a lot since then, especially with this new urban redevelopment plan Quasartico is rolling out. The mayor is really on board with it.”

“Ugh, that mayor,” Serena groaned. “I bet Clemont is more than happy to let the mayor run amok. He’s probably loving all the technology updates.”
The mayor is evil! That's why he allows adds! It's Pokemon Colosseum all over again! :unquag:

Tuning back into the ad, Jett continued, “…that we’ve begun setting up wild zones where they can live comfortably alongside us…”

Serena stared aghast at the images on screen. “Arceus, please don’t tell me that company is wrecking any of the historic architecture to make their little habitats?!” Lumiose’s aesthetics and architecture were sacred!!

“Well…” Urbain weakly trailed off, not wanting to finish, knowing she’d hate the answer.

“That’s not a no,” she noted briskly, clicking her tongue. “The damned mayor is probably revoking the historical status of the structures just to let them do whatever they want! Oh, Lumiose, what have they done to you?” Serena wallowed in grief at the fate of this beautiful city.
Yeah, development really does kill areas/cities sometimes.

Urbain hadn’t expected her to be so opinionated on it. She really didn’t seem like the type to be anti-Pokemon. “You’re really against the wild zones. Do you not like Pokemon in the city?”

“Pokemon in the city is wonderful, they should be allowed to live wherever they like, here or otherwise,” Serena huffed. “Just don’t let companies purposefully destroy history to make that happen! It’s like replacing all of the mirrors in Parfum Palace’s Hall of Mirrors with TVs because mirrors are outdated. This is blasphemous!!” Serena will admit that she had some destruction-related trauma, but regardless, the integrity of Lumiose’s old architecture should be preserved!

Urbain nodded, understanding her argument now. What a relief! She wasn’t anti-Pokemon, that would have been terrible! “Ah, I see what you mean. I agree with you on that one, actually.”
Yeah but WHO is actually anti-pokemon in the pokemon world? :unquag: I don't think I ever see anyone like that in the games or anime. I do expect people like that might exist in fanfics though.

“They better not have touched any of the fountains or obelisks!” Serena protested fiercely, turning her attention back to the stupidly loud video to pour over the visuals and scan for crimes against history.

With a flourish, Jett announced, “We’ve now employed our patented holo-tech in all corners of Lumiose so our interactive guides can teach you more about your surroundings…”

‘Holo-tech… Wait, did they buy out Lysandre Labs’ patents? They were allowed to do that?!’
Serena faltered, her disgust over design choices quickly fading into extreme suspicion of Quasartico. Her eyes widened, horrified. ‘Oh no, their technology is already everywhere in the city!’

As if the woman had prepared her next words specifically for Serena, Jett declared, “A city even more beautiful than before awaits all of us.”

Serena felt like this CEO– Jett was looking directly into her soul, her eyes now filled with a heavy presence far greater than any pre-recorded billboard ad should have been able to convey.

‘Not even 10 minutes back in Lumiose and there’s another charismatic CEO trying to change the world to make it more beautiful with a holo-tech agenda.’ Serena had seen this play out before. It haunted her every night. It was why she couldn’t find it in her to stay in Kalos.
Hmm something tells me Jett is going to be her primary adversary... But I still bet the mayor is behind it!

Serena wished she wouldn’t get involved, but she knew that she couldn’t just leave Kalos to suffer a horrible fate again. No way. She refused. Serena didn’t want to keep playing the hero, but she’d be damned if she didn’t take action when she knew she could do something.

Especially since this only happened in the first place because Serena left Kalos and fled to Hoenn. Serena had been ignoring her league duties, just doing the bare minimum to keep her title, enjoying the fame without the responsibility, and had purposefully abstained from being involved with Kalos’ affairs. Had Serena been more watchful and present, she could have stopped this mess before it was approved.

Before it was everywhere in the city.
Oof! That has to hurt... :copyka:

This happened because of her negligence. Because Serena couldn’t cope with what had happened to her and had to leave to get away from all the reminders, especially in Lumiose. Because Serena couldn’t get over having the fate of the world rest on her shoulders. Couldn’t rationalize the many, many attempts on her and her Pokemon’s lives at the hands of Team Flare.

With knowing that if she failed or made one small mistake, all life on the planet would end.

And it would have been her fault.
She makes darn good points. Thats an insane amount of pressure for any one person to be under! :wowzard:

Because she wasn’t able to deal with seeing a man and his Pokemon crushed to death. Because of her.

Serena had only been 13. She shouldn’t have been expected to cope or be responsible for any of that! She was just a child! The adults in the region should have stepped up and taken care of it like they were supposed to!
Well, maybe in our world, but in the mon world, even as young as 13 is pretty much an adult considering you can go on a Journey at age 10!

Also, 13 is a teen, not a child.

But regardless, I don't really consider what she is thinking here to be objectively wrong. It's understandable considering what she went through and how much she matured since then.

Diantha, Sycamore, the gym leaders, everyone! They all failed her.
A fair observation.

No. Serena refused to be just another oblivious Champion who thrust their responsibility onto some unsuspecting, hopeful child.
Yeah they certainly seem to have a habit of that, don't they? :copyka:

Serena would deal with her mess herself.

It was time to step up and start taking her role as Champion seriously.
A Champion taking responsibility. Respect. :okgon:

Wrapping up the advertisement, Jett politely concluded, “We hope you’ll bear that in mind and pardon our construction work.” The screen faded into Quasartico’s logo. “The Mega Evolution of Lumiose City is coming, brought to you by Quasartico Inc.”

‘Oh, I’m bearing that
beautiful future you want in mind greatly, Quasartico. Message received loud and clear, don’t worry.’ Serena narrowed her eyes, glaring daggers at the billboard and crossing her arms. ‘And no, you’re not excused for the construction work. It’s tacky. Do better.’
I like her spunky confident attitude! :mewlulz:

Serena had immediately noticed the scaffolding as soon as she left the train station doors. Well, that and the newly retrofitted anti-homeless benches. The scaffolding was just that jarring of a contrast from the buildings that immediately stood out! It was garish, ugly, and didn’t match the Lumiose aesthetic at all!! It got a big no, no, no, NO from her!
Oof! And until she sets things right, every time she looks at it she is going to be getting angry!

Anti-homeless benches... It's bad enough that anyone is forced to live on the streets, but to go through the extent to make stuff like that is really sad. :sadwott:

If society has homeless, they should look for ways to help them instead of forcing them away and out of view so society can continue to ignore them while they suffer. Homeless people are people too and it's horrible they are left to live like that! Maybe my views on this are naive, I don't know, but if I'm going to be wrong about something, I'd rather be wrong in a way that cares about people instead of the opposite. I wouldn't want to give handouts to homeless though. Instead I'd want to do something that could help them not have to be homeless anymore! ...Easier said than done though, I'm sure. :sadbees:

“I like how that CEO thinks,” Urbain commended. “Even if her ad did keep us from filming. This city and its Pokemon are a wonder. To know ‘em is to love ‘em! Anyone who visits gets it.”

Calem’s interactions with Lysandre unwillingly flashed in Serena’s mind. “Lumiose and its Pokemon are special, there’s no doubt about that. I won’t let anyone,” she hardened her stare at the billboard, “try to ruin that.”

Not really clocking her ire and only noting her intensity, Urbain tucked his hands behind his head and grinned. “See? You get it! And speaking of people who visit Lumiose, the new promo video is gonna convince them to give Hotel Z a shot! You’re proof it’s already working!”

“Is Hotel Z struggling to get guests?” Serena asked.

“Er, yeah,” Urbain reluctantly admitted, “That’s why I’m doing all the promo videos, you know? Gotta help get new guests somehow.”
Yeah because it's such a great hotel! That's why it's struggling! :unquag:

Serena raised an eyebrow. “Well, you don’t have a website or a place to book online. You’re not exactly making it easy for people to reach out to you to book a room,” she bluntly evaluated. She had thought the lack of online presence was an attempt to look exclusive, not because of incompetence.

Urbain’s energy shrunk. It was a harsh but very fair point. “I’ve tried to get the hotel owner to agree to a website, but he says he won’t do it. Something about being out of touch with new technology,” he defended.
Ok that confirms it. The owner really IS the giant! I suspected it was a marketing ploy/lie or something up until this point.

Serena sighed. “Of course he did,” she muttered under her breath.

“What was that?”

“Nothing,” Serena dismissed. “Anyways, just put me in whatever PR video you wanted to make, and people will flock to the hotel.” It looked like she’d have to forcefully make AZ finally adapt to modern technology.
I love how exasperated she is by him! :mewlulz:

“Wow, that’s some confidence you have there!” Urbain cheered. “I like it! It’s just the energy we need for the video!”

Serena blinked, genuinely perplexed. “…Do you really not recognize me?”
Wait, she wants to be recognized?? :unquag:

Yes, she was wearing a disguise – a trenchcoat and fake glasses – but it was intended for people to not notice her at a glance. It was a tactic to avoid being crowded. Serena had figured it wouldn’t work for people that spent more than a few minutes looking at her.
Ah ok!

“No…? Should I…?” Urbain hesitated. “I mean, you’re pretty enough to be famous, yeah, but I don’t recognize you at all.”

Ironically, from behind Urbain, the billboard that had so graciously delivered the previous message from hell flickered into an ad featuring Serena herself advertising a new fashion line.

Serena glanced up and down between the billboard and Urbain in disbelief. “Wow, okay. This disguise really is working.”

“Oh, are you actually famous then and trying to go incognito?” Urbain wondered.

Serena now found the whole unknown identity thing very amusing. “Yes, something like that.”
This bit is great! :mewlulz:

“Got it!” Urbain raised a finger in front of lips to make a “shh” gesture like he was keeping a secret. “We’ll be super inconspicuous then. Very low key.” He bowed, one arm across his middle, and the other arm out to the side. “Only the most secret of escorts to the hotel for the lady in disguise.” He winked at her.

Serena was momentarily stunned. ‘He’s kind of an idiot, but why is this actually so charming?! That should have been cringy, so why is this working for him?!’
Wow! It gets even better?! 🤣

Urbain smirked at her unbalanced state. “Let me take your bag… Hold up – where’d your bag go?” He looked around, wondering if she’d dropped it somewhere.

“Huh? I could have sworn…” Serena cursed that she’d been momentarily distracted because of a suave line. She was better than that! She still had her go-to pink tote with all her Pokemon, but her luggage bag was gone.

‘Of course, now I’ve been mugged. Just my luck. Welcome back to Kalos, Serena! Have some evil agendas you get to deal with, an ugly scaffolding-chic Lumiose, and a side of robbery.’ Serena groaned disparagingly at her fate. ‘This is really not my day.’

“Hey!” Urbain shouted. “That Pancham’s got it!” He pointed to the Pokemon in question.
Yo, Pancham. You wanna DIE?! 💀

A Pancham danced merrily, bouncing from foot to foot, Serena’s bag hoisted over one of her shoulders, flaunting her grab in their faces. She stuck her tongue out at them and pulled down on her lower eyelid. Pancham blew a raspberry, the leaf in her mouth whistling so the noise sounded like a mocking “toot,” and her taunting expression all but said, “Hahah! Suckers! You’re all idiots!”
Ok, yeah. Pancham wants to die.

“The nerve!!” Serena stomped her foot in frustration, hands fisted by her side.

“Did you hire a Pokemon courier service or something?” Urbain obliviously asked.

Serena looked up to the sky as if the clouds above would give her the grace to handle this situation with. “Arceus, you’re lucky you’re pretty. No!” she exclaimed, meeting his eyes. “What about that looked like it was planned?!”

Urbain blushed. “You think I’m pretty?” he said bashfully.
Pretty? Whaaat? No Ubain, you are supposed to be perturbed she called you pretty instead of handsome! You thick dolt! :unquag:

Serena deadpanned, “Is that really what you took away from what I just said?” She pinched her nose, exasperated. “That Pancham stole my bag!”
I'm enjoying Serena's personality. Vivid and full of spunky confidence! :veelove:

Urbain, finally clued into what was happening, leaned back, bringing his hands up in front of him in shock. “Wait… so your bag got bagnapped?!” He grimaced, looking away and scratching the back of his head, regretful. “I shouldn’t have bugged you with my video stuff… My bad! Come on, I’ll help you get your bag back!” Urbain took off running after the Pancham. Great! He messed up again! Way to be smooth, Urbain! He had to make it right by returning her bag.
At least he didn't shrug and go find another tourist to video instead. He gets some respect for that.

“Thank you!” Serena exclaimed, happy that he was getting with the program. Serena easily matched his pace, running beside him.

“Quick! After that Pokemon!” Urbain commanded his three Pokemon. They scampered ahead. The Pancham made an evasive move to cut down a corner street. “It went into that alley there! Man, that thing can hustle!”

“I see it!” Serena started sprinting, outpacing Urbain, heels clacking rapidly along the cobblestones.

“You know, you run really fast despite wearing heeled boots!” Urbain marveled, impressed.

“Please,” Serena scoffed, “as if I would stumble while wearing designer shoes!” she screamed, outraged at the thought.
I guess she is used to wearing them. Glad the narrative did some lamp-shading with this. Otherwise I would have inquired.

Urbain muffled a laugh. It was cute that being frustrated made her snarky and less composed. “It went left just before that dead end!”

The Pancham stopped. Serena and Urbain paused their chase and watched from around the corner as the Pancham reunited with and showed off his haul to two Trainers.

“I guess this wasn’t just a wild Pokemon randomly messing with you. That bag-napping Pancham must’ve been with those two.” Urbain turned to Serena. “Listen– oh, hey, actually what’s your name?” Urbain glanced away, embarrassed. “Sorry, I should have asked you earlier. Just kinda got caught up in everything.”

“It’s fine, I didn’t exactly ask for your name either. I’m Serena, and you are?” She introduced herself, morbidly wondering when exactly he would clue into realizing who she was.

“Serena? Got it. That’s a nice name! I’m Urbain.”
Urbain, you can't see me, but I am very much face-palming right now! :copyka:

Oh my, I think I'm starting to see parallels between your two presumed main characters and a certain couple of characters from my fic! (The girl doesn't show up until my Book Two, though!)

He gave her a close-eyed beaming smile Serena would have been dazzled by if not for her fixating on the sheer lack of recognition even after having her name. Urbain was clearly still completely clueless. Was her disguise just that good or was he just the oblivious-earnest type? Serena figured it was probably both. “And don’t you worry – I’ve got your back here!”
I guess the fact that you mentioned these two are paired implies romantic pairing? I certainly hope so, because these two seem to have personality types I enjoy watching romance between! :eyes:

“Even a backpacker like me wouldn’t be caught dead with a bag this tacky!” one of the Trainers with Pancham stressed, repulsed by the bag.

“Maybe it was trying to clean up this eyesore,” the other Trainer suggested, trying to reason why Pancham stole such an ugly bag. “Let’s bring it to the cops! Bet they’ll pat us on the back.”

“YOU TAKE THAT BACK!” Serena screeched, scandalized. Her sheer indignation at the slight dominating any need to be sneaky. She stormed over to the two Trainers. “It is vintage Boutique Couture! But I guess a backpacker like you wouldn’t appreciate high fashion.”

“So what if it costs a lot!” the backpacker fumed. “It’s still ugly!!”
Dude has a point. :okgon:

Affronted, Serena was ready to charge her. “WHY YOU–”

“No need to take it to the police guys,” Urbain quickly interrupted, trying to defuse the situation but very amused by Serena’s sudden personality shift. Her very put-together air crumbled when she got upset! “If you haven’t gotten the memo yet, she’s the owner of the bag, just give it back to her.”

Serena backed off with a huff and crossed her arms. No, she was not pouting.
I have to say, the humor is landing very well in this fic so far! :mewlulz:

I'm embarrassed to say that I'm not trying to avoid concrit, it's just that I'm not really finding things that need fixing!

“HEY!! You’re Urbain!!” the backpacker shouted, surprised, but not exactly happy to see him.

Serena was baffled that someone recognized Urbain like he was a big deal when she was standing right there next to him completely anonymous! This disguise was really putting in work! The glasses were definitely worth the exorbitant price tag!

“I… can’t say I know you. Did you see one of the ads I filmed, maybe?” Urbain asked wishfully.

Serena thought it was precious that he sounded so hopeful that his video ads might have been circulating enough for two people to have recognized him today.
I'm still new to writing so I'm not sure what POV this is called. Limited omniscient or something? It seems to work pretty well!

I'm getting a little bit of romantic vibes in the same general way that Timeslip gave them! And trust me that is a BIG compliment! :eyes:

The backpacker shook her head, offended and shocked Urbain didn’t remember her. “It’s me, Andi! From the Z-A Royale! How could you forget already?!”

“Yeah, I’m Andre!” the other Trainer jumped in. “We faced off just last night!”

Urbain put his hands on his hips and looked down his nose at them, haughty. “Oh, Trainers from last night? Sorry, not ringing a bell. Must not have been much of a challenge.” No, he was definitely NOT being extra rude because they brutally crushed his dreams of being recognized twice today from his hotel videos!

Andi looked humiliated. “That stings. But I guess… fair.”
I'm amused by how everyone is so nonchalant about crime having been committed and that they are probably going to battle soon!

Serena, positively gleeful that Urbain was joining her dissing these two, was encouraged to continue poking at them. “No eye for fashion and weak trainers? Please, what do you even have going for you at that point?” She flipped her hair over her shoulder, smirking at them like they were nothing more than peasants huddled outside her castle.

Infuriated, Andre announced, “Listen up! We’ll return your bag – if you battle us right now!”

Urbain shook his head, confused. “That makes no sense. If you want a rematch, all you have to do is wait till nightfall.”

“SHUT UP!” Andre spat. “Pancham’s itching for another shot at you. That’s why it snagged the bag! Uh, probably!”

“It’s nice of you to consider what Pancham wants.” Serena hated that Urbain said that earnestly. Really, Urbain was lucky he was pretty because he was too understanding that and it circled right back around to being gullible!
FINALLY something I can concrit! :wowzard:

This last sentence is worded oddly. I marked out the odd word and switched it to the one in bold that I added. It's either that or the meaning of this sentence is something else entirely.

“But the two of you against me? That’s unfair!”

Serena was more than ready to throw down. If he thought it was unfair now, she was about to swing that wildly in the other direction.

Urbain turned to Serena, looking a little regretful. “Listen. How about I guide you through this mess? I’m just a helpful kind of guy, you see. Your bag got stolen, right? So what’s your next step here?”

Serena clenched her manicured hand into a fist in front of her. “Crush them with no mercy! They will pay for their crimes against fashion.”
I wouldn't mind seeing a mon battle that completely decimates these two! :eyes:

“Er, yeah,” Urbain faltered, though he was internally laughing at her extreme ferocity. “Love to see your priorities are in order. And you’ve got three Pokemon right here ready to help!”
I'm confused how Urbain is aware of how many mon Serena has. I don't remember her saying something about her mon or showing them to him. Unless he is offering his own mon to her to use for the battle but if that is the case, it doesn't seem to mention that.

“Whatever, just hurry up or it’ll be night anyway!” Andi stated impatiently.

“Hear that? They’re down!” Urbain gestured to his own three Pokemon. “Now choose which Pokemon you’ll battle with!”
Ok so he is offering his own. I still feel like the bit farther up could use a bit more. Like maybe after the dialogue have

Urbain held up his Pokeballs.​

Or something like that. You get the idea.

“Thanks for the offer, but there’s no need.” Serena grinned ferally. “I am a Trainer, and I’ve got a full team with me.” These fools were in for a shock!
I feel like 'full' really wants some italics.

I like seeing her so confident. Having a powerful team to crush opponents who have it coming is very satisfying! :veelove:

“Great! You’ll be able to handle this no problem!” Urbain cheered.

“How much longer are you gonna drag your feet?” Andi barked.

Serena clicked her tongue. “Oh, I’m more than ready to battle.” She patted the imaginary creases on her outfit. Serena reached into her tote and pulled out a Pokeball.

“All that waiting drained my momentum. Time to get back into gear! No way I’m gonna get beat by a prissy fashionista like you! You’re going down!” Andi taunted. “Pancham gave us a shot at revenge, and we won’t miss!”

“I respect that spirit. But you’re gonna have egg on your face for real if you lose after that declaration!” Urbain shook his head, skeptical.

“Hey!” Andre shouted, feeling ignored. “Focus up, Urbain – you’re dealing with me!”

“Right,” Urbain rolled his eyes, putting his hands on his hips. “I’m sure you got muuuuch stronger in the day since I beat you!” His abundant sarcasm indicated just how much of a threat Urbain thought this Trainer was.
It amuses me how all their banter is pointless. What IS going to matter is just how badly they are going to lose! 😎

Serena cackled. Urbain might be a gullible idiot, but he was a cute gullible idiot with an edge. She was very much a fan of the unexpected sass!

“Go, Pancham!” The backpacker’s cry caused Serena to refocus on her own battle.

Pancham was brimming with confidence and a self-satisfied glee that the situation she’d arranged for was bearing exactly the fruit she wanted! Revenge!!!

“Sensei, show them who's in charge!” Serena sent out her beloved partner who’d been with her since day one. There was no one better to thoroughly trounce this Pancham than her perfect grossly overpowered Greninja.

Sensei emerged from his Pokeball. Aided by the sunset’s back lighting, the Greninja’s looming shadow stretched far away from his form and completely covered the Pancham, making Sensei appear even larger and intimidating than he already was. Sensei glared menacingly down at the Pancham, red eyes glowing in the dusk low-light.

Pancham suddenly regretted all of the choices she’d made leading to this moment. She messed up. Big time. That was not a normal Greninja!! NO WAY! What was that thing eating!? The souls of the damned?!
I love how we get reactions from Pokemon too. All of it plays quite well into the humor! :mewlulz:

“A Greninja?!” Andi exclaimed. “Whatever, Pancham and I can take you! Pancham, use Tackle!”

Sensei stared at Pancham with a questioning look that read, “You sure about that, buddy?”

Ice ran through Pancham’s veins. Tackle? Please! Like that would do anything to that Greninja. No, she was NOT fighting that thing! Pancham decided to be smart about this and ran back to her Trainer, grabbed the bag she stole, and delicately placed it next to the horror-Greninja’s Trainer. Pancham darted back behind her Trainer’s legs for protection, holding on tight and shivering.

“Pancham??” Andi questioned sharply.
Listen to the Pancham. :okgon:

Serena, extremely satisfied by Pancham’s groveling, felt like this was an even better outcome than winning.
Agreed! 😎

“Look, we don’t have to battle. Your Pancham returned my bag, and she clearly doesn’t want to fight anymore. Don’t force her to battle because of some petty problem you have with Urbain. That’s not fair to Pancham.” Serena might have been be being a little tiny bit of an asshole with this whole battle, but she would never force a Pokemon to battle her that didn’t want to.
Oh this last line is odd. Recommendations above.

“Fine!” Andi relented. “I hate to admit it, but you’re right. This was supposed to make US feel better, not you! Your Greninja is really something else though. You’re fresh off the train, but you’re no newbie, are you?”

Serena snorted. “No, I’m not. Sensei and I have been together for six years now. Did the league circuit and all that.” She gave Sensei a nod and returned him to his Pokeball.

“We really didn’t stand a chance did we?” Andi stated glumly.

“That was some unconventional battle! I’ve never seen a Pokemon get knocked out from Mean Look before!” Urbain mocked, walking over casually from his own complete trouncing of a battle he’d dished out.
Oh, his battle happened off-screen I guess. I suppose he isn't important enough to watch. Serena is where it's at!

“Please tell me you won, Andre!” Andi asked desperately.

“Nope.” Andre hung his head in shame. “Can’t believe I thought I’d score a next-day comeback. My Pokemon and I are so let down.”

Andi reassuringly put her hand on Andre’s shoulder. “This is why you and I get along so well. We even lose together.”

“If you’re that upset, wait till night falls and come try again!” Urbain said good-naturedly with a grin.
These guys aren't grunts in some evil team? Is everyone just going to ignore the bag theft? Not turning them into the police or something? It was funny, but I am now asking why...

“No way! We’re not dealing with you again – not even if we meet during the Royale!” Andi vowed. “Pancham says sorry about the bag. Now au revoir!” The two trainers and Pancham abruptly made their escape.

Urbain raised his hand out for a fist bump towards Serena. At her lack of returning the gesture, he said, “Don’t leave me hanging!”

Serena blinked. “Oh.” She fist bumped him back. Was that a thing in Lumiose now?

“That was huge! We won our first battle side by side! We make a great team, the real makings of a great power duo!” Urbain declared, pumping his fists by his side.
No, Urbain. Serena makes a good team. You just exist to highlight her prowess.

“We did. Next time, let’s have a proper double battle!” she agreed. Urbain might not be at the same level as her battle-prowess wise, but that didn’t matter. He was a dynamic character that would definitely bring some interesting strategies when working as a team! It would be fun!
Fair.

“So there’s gonna be a next time then, huh?” Urbain grinned impishly and folded his hands behind his head.

Not going to allow herself to be caught off-foot again, Serena confidently agreed, “Yeah, there’s going to be a next time for sure. That is, if you can keep up with me.”
Yikes! :copyka:

An order far taller than Urbain would guess!

“Then I’ll train extra hard to make that next time happen!” he whooped, determined to get even stronger.

Without warning, red pillars of light materialized around them.

“Oh man. It’s nightfall already?” Urbain scratched his head worriedly, darting his eyes around him in every direction. “And here we are in a battle zone. Rotten luck.”

“Am I missing something here? What’s happening?” She was puzzled. Serena looked at the red holo-walls with disdain. “I didn’t expect their holo-tech to be this pervasive.”

“We gotta move, so here’s the deal, super-short version… Battle zones are intense! Anyone who finds you in here can challenge you to a battle on the spot!” he cautioned. “I know I said I’d give you a low key trek to the hotel, sorry about this.” Urbain cursed to himself. This was about the least inconspicuous thing that could have happened! First the bag-napping, now this! “I’ll make it up to you, I promise.”
I'm enjoying the fact that with 99% certainty, any trainer that might challenge them is screwed! :mewlulz:

“No, this is in no way your fault. Please, don’t worry unnecessarily over it,” Serena reassured. “Besides, it doesn’t sound that bad based on what you said. But honestly, I’d rather not battle any more tonight. I’m severely jet lagged, and would prefer to get a head start on getting readjusted to the time zone.”

“Gotcha, Hotel Z is right nearby. Let’s get going! My Pokemon here can take care of your bag so it won’t weigh you down.” Urbain gestured to Tepig and Chikorita. “Totodile will stay with me, just in case.”

Serena raised an eyebrow. “You sure? My bag already got stolen once by Pokemon today.”

“Nah, they’ll be fine! Other Pokemon will leave ‘em alone. Plus, those two can climb fences and get into places where people can’t follow ‘em.” Urbain was very confident in his Pokemon’s ability to handle the task.

“Alright.” She squatted down to hand the bag to the two. “You both look very brave and strong, please do your best to ensure my bag makes it to the hotel safely. I’ll make sure to reward you handsomely if you do.”

Chikorita and Tepig puffed their chests out in pride, now taking this courier job much more seriously. They accepted the bag with great care and bounded off.
Cute.

From beside Urbain, Totodile pouted, feeling left out. “Toh, toh…”

Serena noticed the Pokemon’s dour mood. “Don’t worry, Totodile, you’re getting the hardest job out of you three! You have to make sure we make it to the hotel safely. Urbain must have chosen you to stay because you’re the strongest.”

Totodile peered up at her, eyes sparkling, and turned to Urbain for confirmation.

Urbain faltered, not really expecting Totodile's puppy eyes. “Uh, what–” Serena gave him a firm look, silently screaming at him not to crush his Pokemon’s dreams.
This made me smile.

“Oh, yeah. Yeah! You’re so strong, Totodile! There’s no one else I’d trust with our safety more!”

“Tohto, toh, to!!” Totodile burst with life, very excited to play his role now. “Toh!”

“We gotta hightail it outta this battle zone. Follow me! Totodile, you stick close to the front to guard!”

“Toto!” Totodile affirmed seriously.

“This way!” Urbain guided as he started running, leading the group towards the exit. Serena trailed behind, following his lead as they made several turns down alleyways. “Okay, we’re almost there.”

“What have we got here?” Serena whipped around, startled by the waitress’ sudden voice from behind her. “A pair of battle zone loiterers! You must be after a Pokemon battle. So square up and give me your best shot!”

Remembering the last battle he just saw of hers, Urbain winced. “Uhhh, I wouldn’t challenge her if I were you! And anyways, my friend here isn’t part of–”

“I don’t believe anyone asked you!” the waitress snapped at him, cutting him off.
Oof! Urbain is just too pretty to take seriously, it seems.

Urbain covered his eyes with his hand and shook his head slightly. “Hey, I tried.”

Serena waved off Urbain’s concern. “I appreciate the effort. I might be dead tired, but I can pull through one battle.” She would gladly deal with this rude woman.
Serena even if you were sleeping your Pokemon could probably win battles on their own. Heck, if Urbain used your Pokemon, I doubt there would be any problem.

But I'm glad this gives us another chance to see her crush an opponent. Like maybe some people would say easy battles are boring, but I honestly love em! That's because she already put in all the work to become Champion. She deserves to be able to crush opponents like this and it's satisfying to watch.

The waitress flipped her pony tail over her shoulder and glared at Serena. “The points I earn from trouncing you will propel me up the ranks!” Riding high and confident, she sent out the cutest smallest bean of a Cleffa.

The bean let out the most adorable squeaking war cry as she raised her little baby sized arms up to try to be ferocious, “Cleee!” The Cleffa was possibly the tiniest Cleffa Serena had ever seen with the biggest doe eyes. The sheer size of its eyes made it look even smaller.

“Oh, no,” Urbain muttered under his breath, horrified. “That poor Cleffa.” He had seen just how powerful Serena’s Greninja was. She was clearly a very experienced Trainer. More than experienced. She was undoubtedly a veteran Trainer.

The Cleffa was about to go down, hard.
Nah, I bet Serena won't brutalize it.

Serena turned her head to Urbain, face stricken. “Actually, I don’t know if I can do this. I mean, morally.” That might have been the most baby looking Pokemon ever. Did it hatch, like, an hour ago with pre-programed maximum adorable genes?!

This was NOT the same as battling that Pancham!

“Shut up!! Send out your Pokemon already!” the waitress grumbled.

“Clef!!” Cleffa looked equally as irritated, glaring at Serena with her perfect shiny doll-eyes. She curled her little arms up in a “come at me” gesture and started shadow boxing. This Cleffa really did perfectly match her Trainer.
Serena should just go battle it herself. I think a human could take Cleffa, easy.

“Arceus, please don’t send me to hell for this.” Serena quickly ran through the mental math of who had the least damaging move on her team and who could be the gentlest. Shit, no one on her team was particularly gentle! But if she had to choose… “Go Gattaca!” Her Sylveon emerged in a shower of sparkles. “Please, please, please don’t kill the Cleffa!” Serena begged desperately.

“Syl?” Gattaca had the audacity to look confused by the direction.

“Cleffa, use Tackle!”
Wait a minute! 🧐

Is Serena going to lose because she will recall her mon before it can kill Cleffa??? :unquag:

“Uh,” Serena stuttered, unsure of how to handle a battle for the first time in years. “Gattaca, just- just tap it lightly with one of your ribbons, okay? Like 5%- no 2% power!” Serena pinched two of her fingers together to emphasize just how small she meant.

“Syl!” Gattaca nodded in confirmation.

“Oh, thank Arceus,” Serena sighed in relief that Gattaca understood.

The little Cleffa came charging in at the Sylveon, armed with a confidence of a thousand burning suns,
I LOVE this line here! That's such a great descriptor! 🤣

and about to execute the most epic Tackle of her life. “Cle–”

Gattaca, as instructed, used one of her ribbons to bat Cleffa away, sending it rocketing at high speeds before it slammed into the side of the nearby building with a loud resounding crack and a cloud of dust. Debris fell from the point of contact on the wall.
Oh my gosh, is Cleffa alright?? :copyka:

Due to her round body, Cleffa bounced off the building and bopped along the street, like a bouncy ball slowly losing momentum, until she skidded, face down on the pavement, to a stop back in front of the Sylveon.

Cleffa was bruised, battered, and most notably not moving.

“Syl~ve!!” Gattaca trilled merrily over the defeated limp body of her enemy. She did an excellent job!

“C…le…f….” Cleffa weakly and painfully mumbled, barely audible.

Oh, thank Arceus, it wasn’t dead! Serena hid her face in her hands. Gattaca did NOT understand!! That was way too much power! She should have never trusted her to be gentle!!!
Yeeeeahh....... :copyka:

“CLEFFA!” her Trainer yelped, the worry and panic clear in her voice, rushing over and dropping to her knees in front of the downed Pokemon. Serena hurriedly dug into her purse.

“I am SO sorry!!! Please use this Max Revive!” Serena shoved the Max Revive into the waitress’ hands who administered it promptly.

Though now out of danger, the Cleffa was still very woozy and looked worse for wear. The waitress returned Cleffa to her Pokeball. She had her Bunnelby as well, but wasn’t going to risk their health too. “Another night spent battling in the Z-A Royale with no points to show for it…” she muttered.

“Um, ma’am, you need to take your Cleffa to a Pokemon Center immediately!” Serena pressed, genuinely worried about the health of Cleffa.

“I tried to tell you!” Urbain shook his head, also looking stricken. “And Serena’s right! You need to leave, now!”

“Toto! To, dile!” Totodile insisted, just as upset.
Serena, you should have just had Urbain battle instead. I bet Totodile wouldn't have pile drived the poor little Cleffa into near-oblivion... :copyka:

Coming to her senses and snapping out of her shock-riddled brain, the waitress scrambled back to her feet. “R-Right!!” she darted off, sprinting.

Urbain watched as she left, unable to tear his eyes away from Cleffa’s Pokeball. “Honestly? I think I heard it pop like a balloon when it hit that wall.”

“I’m going to have nightmares about this,” Serena said solemnly, eyes distant.
That's why you should only let Urbain battle weakling cutie-pies for you instead. Just let Urbain be your body-guard. If someone beats him, then they can taste the infinite hopeless despair of battling you!

“Syl~ve~on~!” Gattaca chimed with a little dance, wiggling her ribbons and tail, cheering herself on for her good work of utterly destroying that precious little angel.

“No!! You don’t get to be happy about that!” Serena spat, pointing at Gattaca accusingly. “I trusted you to be nice!!”

“Ve,” the Sylveon scoffed and gave her a look that said, “I WAS nice!”
And I am laughing yet again. Love this humor in this fic! :mewlulz:

“Hey.” Urbain caught Serena’s attention. “So here’s my advice as your kind new friend who loves helping people…” Even though his evaluation of himself was true, it sounded incredibly sarcastic. “Stay out of the battle zones.”

“Yeah, no SHIT!” Serena exclaimed, the most frazzled she’d been all day. She glared at Gattaca and returned her to her Pokeball.

“Let’s get the hell out of here before someone else comes after us looking for a battle!” Urbain shuddered. “I don’t think I could handle watching another repeat of Cleffa.”
And so they need to avoid battles like the plague because they are too strong! 🤣

Good stuff.

As they continued to make their way out of the battle zone, their path was blocked once again. Three Trainers stood just in front of the exit, all itching for a battle and sights trained on Urbain and Serena.

Urbain worriedly glanced off to the side, scratching the back of his head, and unsure of how to proceed.

“Thank Arceus it’s not another Cleffa,” Serena breathed in relief at the sight of the Honedge, Pansear, and Hearacross. All opponents she was completely morally okay with dispatching ruthlessly and were decidedly not newborn baby adorable beans.
Again, love the descriptor. You've done very well with those! :mewlulz:

“Look,” Urbain started, hoping this time he could resolve this with words. “I’m trying to get our hotel guest to safety. Let us through, would you?” He gestured to Serena beside him, then held his hands up in a placating gesture.

The battle girl uncrossed her arms and sneered, “Too bad for your guest! Once you step into a battle zone, you’re a target like everyone else!”

Urbain unceremoniously dropped his arms down by his side and looked defeated. No, he steeled himself, Urbain couldn’t allow another Cleffa to happen. Never again.

“If you want a target,” Urbain walked in front of Serena, “I’m right here!” He dropped into a battle ready stance.

“Toto.” Totodile matched his Trainer’s determination.

“Kyururu!” a Pokemon cry came from above. Serena and Urbain looked up, following the noise. Floette gracefully floated down between the two parties preparing for battle. When she raised her flower that had been blocking her view, Floette chirped excitedly upon seeing Serena.

“A Floette with a black flower, huh?” the jogger Trainer commented sharply. “You don’t see that every day. Let’s see how it battles!”

Floette looked over her shoulder back at the other Trainers and glared at them. How dare they interrupt her reunion with Serena! She swung her flower around and started to charge up a Light of Ruin, the only appropriate response to such a slight!
Oh is this AZ's mon?

“NO! Don’t hit them!” Urbain reached out frantically, desperately trying to prevent another Cleffa incident.

Fine. Floette pouted. Urbain always ruined her fun. She fired off her blinding cannon of a move juuuust above the three trainers heads and into the sky above. Floette reveled in seeing the beam’s light flicker away against the night sky.

There was a moment of silence before the three Trainers glanced at each other, then stumbled over themselves to scramble away, fleeing as fast as they could. Floette cackled. Urbain had been right! That was much funnier than actually hitting them with Light of Ruin!
Power levels here be crazy! And I like crazy. :veelove:

Floette turned back around to face Urbain and Serena, ready for praise.

“Nicely done, Floette!” Urbain, so very relieved it didn’t turn into another Cleffa situation,
Cleffa? Forget Cleffa! She was about to ever-loving MURDER them! :copyka:

was completely fine with not saying anything about Floette’s almost murder.
What on earth? Urbain is just going to sweep the almost murder under the rug? Um, ok...! :copyka:

“But maybe you should save that Light of Ruin move for when it really counts, huh?” he commented instead with a slight laugh.

Floette stubbornly puffed out her cheeks. That wasn’t what she was looking for.

“Floette!” Serena greeted her cheerfully. “That was some crazy power! You must have been training hard!”

“Kryu!” Floette trilled happily at the acknowledgement. She floated around Serena while preening and moving her flower about like a sword. “Ku, ruru.” Yes, Floette had been training, thank you for noticing.

“Woah, Floette really likes you!” Urbain marveled.

“And I really like Floette! Your flower looks extra pretty today! It must be basking in the glow of that Light of Ruin you just fired!” Serena complemented. Floette twirled her flower bashfully with a blush. There was a reason why Serena was her favorite. She then floated up to sit on Serena’s head. Floette pointed excitedly with her flower towards the hotel.
I love how something so cute can be so ruthlessly OP! :mewlulz:

Granted, I think that bit is canon lore.

Serena chuckled. “Of course, m’lady, as your loyal steed, I shall lead you wherever you please! Order away!”

“Kryuuuu~!”

“You’re really good with Pokemon,”
And likely children too by extension if you catch my drift, eh Urbain? :unquag:

Urbain noted, watching their easy exchange. “Hey, how long did you say you’re staying in Lumiose?” Serena was definitely the kind of person he wanted on Team MZ!

“Thank you. I’m not quite sure, I haven’t exactly booked a return ticket yet.” Serena had new, fun, and exciting megalomaniacs to deal with first before she decided where to settle down in Kalos again.

Urbain smiled softly, meeting Serena’s gaze. “So what you’re saying is that there’s a chance I could convince you to stay longer?”
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:mewlulz:

‘Why is he so charming?!’ Serena screamed in her head. The line had come out of nowhere! He can’t just say something like that casually!

Tickled by the exchange, Floette leaned down from her perch to pat Serena’s face, snapping her out of it.

“I mean,” Serena bumbled out an answer, “I don’t have any plans yet so…”

Urbain beamed and did a small victory jump. “I’ll take it! A chance is all I’ll need!” Wow, this boy was NOT good for her heart! “You’ll see. Besides, once you see how great Hotel Z is, you’ll never want to leave!”
Somehow I bet Urbain's charm will be the thing keeping her there and she will try to deflect and blame it on the 'amazing' hotel! 🤣

“Hotel Z, right,” Serena weakly tried to pivot. “Let’s go there.”

“Great!” Urbain’s 10,000 kilowatt smile was still going strong. “Follow me! I don’t think I’ve ever been more relieved to leave a battle zone.”

After exiting the red holo-gateway, Hotel Z was only a few paces away. The building was an exemplary example of old Lumiose architecture, complete with the cobble stone courtyard and climbing ivy.

“Welcome to our humble establishment,” Urbain bowed as if he was a butler and looked up at Serena from under his eyelashes cheekily, “Hotel Z! You won’t find a more tranquil, relaxing stay anywhere in Lumiose…” Urbain’s confidence faltered, wincing as he trailed off. “Because we don’t have a single other guest,” he finished ruefully.
:unquag:

Serena smiled warmly at Urbain. “A tranquil, relaxing stay is just what I’m looking for,” she announced primly.

He chuckled. “Great! Come on in!” Urbain held the door open for her. “After you.”

“Thank you.” She looked around the lobby, it really had that wonderful rustic cozy feeling. She couldn’t help but smile upon seeing the patchwork sewn curtains and the mis-matched chairs. This space had AZ written all over it. Serena loved it. Floette left her spot on Serena’s head and drifted back to AZ.

“I’m back, AZ!” Urbain called out, entering after her, and letting the door close. He met AZ at the counter. “Check it out – I brought us a guest!”

Serena withheld the snort she wanted to make upon seeing the giant of a man in the flesh wearing his dapper little suit manning the comically short reception desk. With his color pallet, bangs, and bow tie he looked exactly like a Dartrix! Imagine a Rowlett in a tiny bell hop uniform and hat!!! Aaah!! She needed to make that happen and get her hands on a few Rowlett for this hotel. A fleet of adorable gentleman Pokemon butlers was exactly what would set Hotel Z apart! The more Serena thought about it, the more ideas she had for this place!
Why do I get the feeling Serena will be helping them out a ton with this place?

But before she could get to any of those finer details, she had a grand mysterious entrance to make.

“It’s been a while, AZ,” Serena said from where she was looming in the doorway, eyes cast downwards. Serena was taking much joy in making her entrance as unnecessarily dramatic as possible.
Love it. :mewlulz:

“When I heard you were running a hotel, I didn’t believe it and had to come see for myself.” She slowly started to approach, then snapped her head up to meet AZ’s gaze.

AZ’s eyes widened in recognition. “Serena…?”

But Serena was nowhere near done with her bit. “Wow, you’ve really cleaned yourself up over the years. A vest and a bow tie? Really AZ? I’m shocked. You look way less homeless now. What else have I missed in 5 years? It’s comforting that Floette is still as trigger happy as ever though. At least she hasn’t changed.”

AZ smiled at her words, glad to see that Serena was just as theatrical as ever. “It’s good to see you again. You’ve grown up.”

“That is what happens when a normal human gets older. We’re not all immortal.” Serena rolled her eyes, then matched AZ’s smile. “But jokes aside, it’s good to see you and Floette again too. I’m really happy to see that the years have finally been kind to you. 3,000 years is too much pain for anyone, even you. You deserve this.”
Well put!

“Thank you.” AZ’s heart warmed. “Life has been treating me well, and I hope the same for you.”

Urbain blinked. “Oh, you and AZ know each other?” Ah, that’s why she came to Lumiose after seeing his video! Not only did his ad work, but it also reunited two friends! Urbain really was excellent at making videos.

AZ nodded. “Yes, I owe Serena a great debt after everything she did for me five years ago.” Not only had Serena reunited him with Floette, but she had done everything in her power to help him get back on his feet afterwards, even if he refused most of her help. They had spoken at length together about his past, his sins, and his regrets. But that didn’t scare Serena off.
Good job with Serena's character. I like her.

Instead, she sympathized with his struggle of having the weight of the world on his shoulders and not making perfect choices that came with awful consequences. Serena continued to spend time with him, true quality time. They joked together, laughed together, ate together, and cried together. It made AZ feel like a person again for the first time in many, many years.

AZ would forever be grateful to Serena for that.

“I’ve told you already, you don’t owe me anything,” Serena insisted. “Just let Lemis hang out with Floette, and we’re even.” Lemis would fit in the hotel’s secluded courtyard out front, which was perfect. It was cute watching a giant hulking bird of death be best friends with a dainty Floette. Those two could gab for hours over their ancient war stories.

‘Immortals,’ Serena rolled her eyes.
That's not a statement and gesture you see lumped together often!

“Your stay here will be on the house,” AZ declared with a nod. Floette spending time with Yveltal was nowhere near enough now that he finally had some means to pay her back.

“No, it will not!” Serena stated, narrowing her eyes. “Urbain told me your hotel is struggling! I will be paying in full and tipping a LOT!” she emphasized.

AZ shook his head mirthfully. “It’s a kind offer, but I refuse to accept money from you.”

Serena pulled her wallet out of her tote bag and dropped an exorbitantly huge sum of cash onto the counter. “I can more than afford to stay here, so I will be paying! I am a paying customer. Emphasis on paying!” Serena challenged.

AZ pushed the money back towards her. “You’re overpaying!” he countered.

Serena scoffed. “You’re going to take it, or I will sneak into the lobby at night and put it in the register myself!”

“It’s too much, and even if it wasn’t, I won’t take money from you,” AZ denied staunchly.

Serena smirked. “If it makes you feel any better, you can consider the money my charitable contribution to the preservation of Kalos’ esteemed history as a part of my league responsibilities, or a generous donation to the elderly, either works.” Serena looked at AZ innocently with wide eyes. “We can’t have our national relic dying on us or destitute again, can we?”

AZ’s face hardened, becoming stormy and serious. Serena looked just as vicious and intense as AZ.
Nice! What a scene! :eyes:

Urbain’s eyes widened. He’d never seen AZ look like that before! ‘Oh shit, she pissed off AZ!! …Though, she’s not wrong, we do need the money.’

But to Urbain’s utter surprise, they both erupted in laughter.

AZ brightened. “It is good to see you again.”

“Yeah, it is good to see you too, gramps.” Serena smiled genuinely, voice light.

Serena truly had missed him.

“Speaking of, we have to get you a website for this hotel. I know you’re very out of touch,” Serena lamented sarcastically while checking her nails, “but I’ll painstakingly teach you how to use a Rotom Phone to manage reservations. Before you go off again with, “back in my day,” gramps, back in your day you had sticks and rocks for tools. The stone age is over. It’s time to adapt.”
:mewlulz:

AZ sighed. “Serena, I–”

“And I’m still not over the Holo Caster thing,” Serena cut him off. “I know five years must not feel like anything to you, but it was a long time for me. Make it up to me by doing this.”

“I’m truly sorry, Serena,” AZ apologized sincerely, forlorn. “Five years isn’t nothing.”

“You’re more than forgiven as long as you don’t let it happen again,” Serena relented. The lack of contact had really hurt her. Serena had needed his support, she had come to rely on it after everything five years ago, and it was a struggle to be suddenly stripped of that when she needed it most.

“Alright,” AZ acquiesced with a long tired sigh, “I’ll give the Rotom Phone a try.”

“Great!” Serena bounced back cheerfully.
Seeing them banter back and forth is actually pretty wholesome!

Urbain chuckled at the exchange. He didn’t realize AZ had friends, let alone close friends! “You guys must be really close, huh? So how did you meet each other before Hotel Z?” Urbain had to know the story behind how such a pretty stylish girl ended up being best friends with the hulking grandpa that was AZ.

“Wow, you really don’t recognize me even after knowing my name,” Serena deadpanned. “Our meeting was broadcast on live television.” Serena took off the glasses she was wearing. “How about now?”

With the glasses removed, it finally clicked who she was, and Urbain blurted out, “Arceus, you’re Serena! You’re the Champion!” Urbain very much knew who she was! He watched all of the videos of her matches! Her battles were wild and her strategies awe-inspiring. She was someone every trainer in the region studied and looked up to!

Wait, that meant the Sylveon that did horrible things to that Cleffa was THAT Sylveon!! He winced. Yikes, no wonder that happened. It was like trying to delicately knock a pebble off a table with a shotgun.

“Yes, that’s me,” Serena confirmed airily as she admired the glasses in her hands. “Wow, these fake glasses really are killer.”
The disguise and reveal was fun!

‘Well, now I gotta try even harder to convince her to stay! She’s exactly the kind of member Team MZ is looking for! With the Champion on our side, we can protect Lumiose no problem!’ Urbain resolved. ‘She’s not at all what I imagined THE Serena to be like. I like the real Serena a lot more!’
Ooo he is going for some smooth points there!

AZ chuckled, enjoying Urbain’s shock. AZ hadn’t realized Urbain didn’t know Serena’s title, but was glad he got to witness the rug being pulled out from under him. Serena’s travel bag caught his eye. More precisely, the Zygarde cell crawling out of her travel bag. It was an omen to ponder over later.

“I was concerned when a bag arrived with no owner,” AZ explained now that Serena’s bag was on his mind. “That is why I sent Floette out to seek you. It seems my worries were unfounded, after all, you had Serena by your side.”

“No, I’m glad you did! Floette saved our skins with her Light of Ruin – it’s a heck of a move,” Urbain applauded. “You’re so wise, AZ, I can almost believe you really ARE three thousand years old like you always say!” he snickered.
But... he IS! :unquag:

Serena giggled, loving the fact that apparently no one believed AZ’s age was real, but cut herself off with an unwilling yawn. She was dead tired. Far, far too much had happened today. She needed her beauty sleep!
Oh! Good point. She was indicating she was tired earlier. I had forgotten!

Noticing this, AZ nodded at her. “Serena, before you retire, pray, allow me a few words. I hope you’ll indulge me as your host.” AZ straightened, standing up a little taller. “Treasure your companions, and never betray that faith. That is all I wish to say.”

“I understand, AZ,” Serena acknowledged sincerely. AZ had made countless mistakes in his past, regrets he would carry with him forever, and this sage advice was the culmination of his entire life. Those were the words AZ now lived by, his lesson finally learned that day at her Champion parade.

Serena was never going to be one to betray her Pokemon, but she understood that he was speaking about more than just her Pokemon. He was speaking as a ruler, a king, advising her on how she should be handling her Champion title. To AZ, a man who had lived 3,000 years and was a king of Kalos in his own right, “companions” meant “the people of Kalos” and “the people you share this life with.”

His words also served as a subtle criticism of her lack of action. It stung, but he was right.
Sage advice that she is heeding. Well done!

Serena knew AZ saw what she saw was afoot in Lumiose. AZ had been right beside her five years ago, after all, and was privy to all of the details. He was one of the few that saw the same side of Lysandre that she did.

“Good.” AZ nodded, satisfied, hunching back over his cane once more. “Room 202 is yours to use.” He handed her the key to the room.

“You can take the elevator to the second floor,” Urbain provided helpfully. “Rest up for tonight, then come meet me down here in the lobby tomorrow morning!”

“Alright. Thank you for your help today, Urbain. It was very kind of you. I’m excited to get to know you better during my stay.” Serena smiled brightly.

“Nah, it was nothing! I’m happy to help!” Urbain blushed slightly and scratched the back of his head, looking away. “And I can’t wait to get to know you too.”
Ooo! Urbain gets his lines in there! 😎

“Well then, goodnight to both of you.” Serena grabbed her bag, and headed into the elevator with a wave.

Once the elevator doors closed, Floette hovered over to Urbain, who was still staring at the elevator, and slyly nudged him with her flower

“What?” Urbain blinked, then looked at Floette’s knowing look. “No, it’s not like that!” he insisted. Floette tittered mirthfully, not at all believing him. “Okay, maybe a little like that. But just a little!” he conceded.

AZ chortled. “Serena is a wonderful young lady,” he commented approvingly.

Urbain groaned, hiding his face in his hands. “Not you too, AZ.”
I love how everyone is already in on it! :mewlulz:

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*Knock, knock*

“Hey. Sorry, I know I said you should sleep, but can we talk for a sec?” Urbain’s muffled voice came from the other side of her door.

Serena was so thankful she hadn’t changed or gotten ready for bed yet. She scrambled to open the door.

Urbain bowed to her once more. “Begging your pardon, dear guest! I neglected to show you our hotel’s true gem – a stunning panorama.” He rose from the bow and winked. “That means, “C’mon, you gotta see the roof!””

Serena curtsied back. “Why of course, good sir, I’d be delighted.” She linked their arms together, and grinned up at him. “You may escort me.” Serena reveled in the fact that it was Urbain this time who was startled and struggled to make eye contact until they parted once they reached the roof. Ha!
Woah! Urbain's best day just got bestester! :letsgorb:

“Bit late now, but welcome back to Lumiose City!” Urbain walked to the railing and looked out over the twinkling lights. “It’s got its weird parts, but it’s a good place. I like it here.”

Serena joined him at the railing. “A very apt assessment, I agree.”

Urbain’s face turned uncharacteristically serious. “Listen… I owe AZ big-time for all the help he’s given me since I got here. I want to do right by him in return. Not to put you on the spot, but since you seem really close to AZ… think you could give me a hand?”

Serena understood that look well, the unspoken weight of one’s past. “I’d be happy to.” She was never one who could ignore an earnest plight. Despite everything, Serena still had a bleeding heart. Besides, AZ was her dear friend, she’d always be there to help him.

“You’re the best!” Urbain grinned, sticking his fist out. Serena returned the fist bump.

Even with the chaos and re-emerging trauma the day had brought, Serena was glad to be back in Lumiose. Her return brought back the companionship she’d gone years without. AZ really did know what he was talking about, huh? That wise old man.

As she gazed out at Prism Tower, Serena made a solemn vow to herself that she would never allow anything like Lysandre to ever happen to this city and her region again. Her extended sabbatical in Hoenn was over. Serena had been running for too long. It was time to take a stand and show Kalos that she was here to protect its future.

It was time to be a true Champion.

The one Serena had desperately wished Diantha was, and failed to be, for Kalos five years ago.
Powerful note to end the first chapter on!



End Notes

Nickname central:
Sensei (Greninja) – because he acts like a know-it-all wise old man and tries to teach the other party members things like he knows better. He does not know better.
Daaang you even inject humor into the end notes! :mewlulz:

Gattaca (Sylveon) – named after the nucleobases of DNA (G, A, T, C) and the excellent sci-fi movie about genetic bio-engineering, GATTACA.
Ok, cool. But why?

Lemis (Yveltal) – named after the shortened slang of Les Miserables, Le Mis. The book title translates to English literally as “The Miserable Ones,” but can also mean "the wretched," or "the outcasts." All of which fit Yveltal very well. Also because the whole book is about (among many other things) destruction, death, and revolution in Paris.
Hmm ok but I still don't get it. :unquag:

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My favorite bit of NPC dialogue is when you're on a random rooftop or street and then some guy just has a balloon over his head that says something like, “Hey, remember that power outage from 5 years ago? That was wild,” or “I liked the city better 5 years ago,” or “Whatever happened to that Holo Caster news lady?” like “that Holo Caster news lady” WASN'T an E4 member.

The sewers were unironically the best looking map in the game. Also, not me in the Lumiose sewers continuously saying, “We’ve got to get you out of here, Marius,” and looking at a Litwick and going, “Marius, what’s wrong with you today, you look as if you’ve seen a ghost.” I named my sewer Litwick Marius. I love my sewer Litwick.

So I have some gripes with the game lol, but I actually loved playing it!! The battle system was REALLY fun, customization was excellent, the new Megas were 10/10, and I loved the characters. I just felt like the plot was thinner and a little weaker than it could have been. That, and there were a lot of underused characters.

Why Serena? The plot of the PLZA game becomes infinitely more complicated if the protag is the XY protag lol. This is by no means going to be a bashing of PLZA, it’s going to be a reimagining of the plot by beefing it up with all of those little things I know we ALL wished would have happened. Also, I’m not officially saying yet that I’m making Quasartico evil lol, Serena is ✨paranoid and traumatized✨
Hmm perhaps, but Quasartico gives evil vibes. 👻

Closing thoughts:
Ok, the first thing I'm doing here is addressing the elephant in the room. Word count. Holy COW this was long! Your next chapter is 18k? Excuse me???:copyka: Are you aware of just how short attention spans are these days? People may say "Oh chapters length is no big deal, you can make chapters however long you want" Yeah, no. Screw that. Way too long. 10k max. If you want to be average, shoot for 5k. If you want to be real good, shoot for under 5k. You will get WAY more readers if you find ways to split them up. There is no excuse for an 18k chapter. I think I might be the only one bold enough to call you out on this, but I imagine most people think it even if they don't say it...

Your fic will be much more attractive during blitz if you find ways to split these chapters up. That said, long chapters don't stop review exchanges during non-blitz time because most review exchange partners look at total word count when exchanging rather than chapters. But even review exchange partners would prefer smaller chunks. Now, do I think you would have the same chapter one experience if you split it up? Obviously not. The way you ended chapter one was great. Splitting them up would not let you have that kind of delivery, but shorter chapters are significantly more important than a powerful first-chapter ending. Seems crazy but I really believe that. Even with as good of an ending as you had. Ok. Rant complete. I don't plan to bring length up again for your fic either if/when I pop back in for another review in the future.

Now that the thing I saw as a glaring issue was addressed, I can delve into other things. I was able to find very little in the way of editing/spelling/narrative critique and it wasn't for a lack of trying. I'm not a veteran writer, so I'm sure some more experienced authors could point stuff out.

Now for the gushing. Everything from the writing, characters, and events were fantasic. This fic made me laugh numerous times and each character is brimming with life and personality. This fic is darn impressive and I thouroghly enjoyed reading it. If it has other problems or errors, I doubt they will even approach harming the experience for the average reader. I don't think anyone expects a new user to post a fic of this quality. Well done!

Perhaps if you are inclined you might review my fic? I'd love to hear from you, if so!
 

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Excited to dig into a new fic, this concept sounds particularly fun! Don't mind me, I will be making some playful jabs at characters and sarcasm as well as commentary.
The account had several other short promotional videos, all only racking up single digit views,
Thats because you suck at making videos Urbain sweetie :mewlulz:
very cute
Doubtful but sure lets go with that :mewlulz:. But I can see that Serena might think this until he opens his mouth.
AZ, the 3,000-year-old giant homeless senile war criminal who interrupted her Champion parade, owned a HOTEL?!
every time I read this line it kills me, its so funny. I never even thought of what the XY protags might think but this would be SO funny if they saw it.
“So let’s keep spreading the word about how great Hotel Z is. And once we get a guest who has what it takes, we’ll recruit ‘em to the cause!
Cult leader Urbain looking for his new devotees /j
Urbain’s heart fluttered, and he couldn’t help himself from impulsive shouting, “REALLY?!” This was one of the best days of Urbain’s life. It wasn’t even that she was planning a trip to Lumiose and happened to see his advertisement. No. She came to Lumiose JUST to stay in Hotel Z because of HIS video!

“TOTODILE?!” Totodile screeched, eyes practically popping out of his head.
Even Totodile can't believe someone watched his trainers cringe videos lol. Urbain is kind of adorable tho
she was completely okay with endorsing AZ’s hotel de war crimes.
dying at this.
“Oh, that’s it? You don’t want to spice up the promo with camera angles and effects?
No, of course he doesn't, he wouldn't know a good vine if it hit him in the face.
What is the new mayor thinking?!”
Bold of you to assume the new mayor is thinking at all.
Lumiose’s aesthetics and architecture were sacred!!
yeah its done for, sorry Serena. I hope they have great construction crews in Lumiose...
“They better not have touched any of the fountains or obelisks!”
Wait until you meet the death Fletchinder on the one obelisk and the worlds most annoying Froakie sentry on the other. Also when they start overruning the plaza's with holo-zones and pushing out the people.
‘Holo-tech… Wait, did they buy out Lysandre Labs’ patents? They were allowed to do that?!’ Serena faltered, her disgust over design choices quickly fading into extreme suspicion of Quasartico. Her eyes widened, horrified. ‘Oh no, their technology is already everywhere in the city!’
Yeah like, this reeks of massive sus and Serena is completely justified here. It looks super extra bad in light of what happened 5 years ago.
‘Not even 10 minutes back in Lumiose and there’s another charismatic CEO trying to change the world to make it more beautiful with a holo-tech agenda.’ Serena had seen this play out before. It haunted her every night. It was why she couldn’t find it in her to stay in Kalos.
:unquag: Yiiiikkkeesssss lol. Even knowing how Quasartico is (supposedly, apparently) not evil its so hard to believe. Poor Serena hah. Qusartico really looks stupidly bad, they need a better marketing guy.
This happened because of her negligence. Because Serena couldn’t cope with what had happened to her and had to leave to get away from all the reminders, especially in Lumiose. Because Serena couldn’t get over having the fate of the world rest on her shoulders. Couldn’t rationalize the many, many attempts on her and her Pokemon’s lives at the hands of Team Flare.
Nooo Serena. It's not all your fault. Poor thing, I feel bad for her. But also YESSSSS juicy trauma, I'm here for it. I think this is actually really fun and an interesting angle to take the story bc the XY protag is very justified in feeling upset by the events of the games.
And it would have been her fault.
Nooooo its not all your fault! But also :copyka:
“I like how that CEO thinks,” Urbain commended. “Even if her ad did keep us from filming. This city and its Pokemon are a wonder. To know ‘em is to love ‘em! Anyone who visits gets it.”

Calem’s interactions with Lysandre unwillingly flashed in Serena’s mind.
I know he's technically right bc Jett isn't evil but also, stuff it Urbain lol
Serena raised an eyebrow. “Well, you don’t have a website or a place to book online.
oh my GOSH of course they don't 🤦‍♀️
the billboard that had so graciously delivered the previous message from hell flickered into an ad featuring Serena herself advertising a new fashion line.

Serena glanced up and down between the billboard and Urbain in disbelief. “Wow, okay. This disguise really is working.”
:mewlulz: cackling. Urbain is suitably and exactly as dense as I always pictured.
‘He’s kind of an idiot,
To put it mildly
Serena looked up to the sky as if the clouds above would give her the grace to handle this situation with. “Arceus, you’re lucky you’re pretty. No!” she exclaimed, meeting his eyes. “What about that looked like it was planned?!”

Urbain blushed. “You think I’m pretty?” he said bashfully.
FOCUS Urbain :mewlulz:. But also sorry Serena there's no grace Arceus can give that will be sufficient to deal with Urbain.
Pancham suddenly regretted all of the choices she’d made leading to this moment. She messed up. Big time. That was not a normal Greninja!! NO WAY! What was that thing eating!? The souls of the damned?!
This battle is gold, I love it. I really enjoy comedic stuff with OP characters and this was great.
Whatever, Pancham and I can take you!
Your confidence and where it comes from is a mystery.
Riding high and confident, she sent out the cutest smallest bean of a Cleffa.
Oh No
“Arceus, please don’t send me to hell for this.”
At this rate, knowing you also apparently have Yveltal I don't think he could if he wanted to :mewlulz:. But really if anyone should be sent to hell its the person with a tiny Cleffa challenging just anyone willy nily.
“Please, please, please don’t kill the Cleffa!” Serena begged desperately.

“Syl?” Gattaca had the audacity to look confused by the direction.
"You forbid miette from murder??"
Gattaca, as instructed, used one of her ribbons to bat Cleffa away, sending it rocketing at high speeds before it slammed into the side of the nearby building with a loud resounding crack and a cloud of dust. Debris fell from the point of contact on the wall.
Very gentlely cratered it into a wall. The poor architecture.
“No!! You don’t get to be happy about that!” Serena spat, pointing at Gattaca accusingly. “I trusted you to be nice!!”
To be fair, Serena, you trusted a fae cat, so maybe this was on you :mewlulz:
3,000 years is too much pain for anyone, even you. You deserve this.”
<3 awww yeeee thank you Serena. I'm glad someone is kind to him and understands him. 3000 years is a long as frick time, he suffered enough.
Urbain really was excellent at making videos.
No, no he is not :mewlulz:
Instead, she sympathized with his struggle of having the weight of the world on his shoulders and not making perfect choices that came with awful consequences. Serena continued to spend time with him, true quality time. They joked together, laughed together, ate together, and cried together. It made AZ feel like a person again for the first time in many, many years.
<3 This is sweet, and helps define Serena's character a good bit by showing both what she struggles with and he empathy in connecting with AZ over their struggles.
“Just let Lemis hang out with Floette, and we’re even.” Lemis would fit in the hotel’s secluded courtyard out front, which was perfect. It was cute watching a giant hulking bird of death be best friends with a dainty Floette. Those two could gab for hours over their ancient war stories.
oh my gosh she has the freakin Yveltal from XY too??? She's stacked. Can't wait for Urbain's reaction to that.
“Arceus, you’re Serena! You’re the Champion!” Urbain very much knew who she was! He watched all of the videos of her matches! Her battles were wild and her strategies awe-inspiring. She was someone every trainer in the region studied and looked up to!
FINALLY. Man boy got one braincell bouncing around and it just hit the corner of his brain like a DVD logo just now.
I just felt like the plot was thinner and a little weaker than it could have been. That, and there were a lot of underused characters.
Huge freakin mood hah. I loved this game so much despite glaring problems I had with the narrative but wooww did the executions and ways some stuff played out feel rough as ever.
Why Serena? The plot of the PLZA game becomes infinitely more complicated if the protag is the XY protag lol. This is by no means going to be a bashing of PLZA, it’s going to be a reimagining of the plot by beefing it up with all of those little things I know we ALL wished would have happened. Also, I’m not officially saying yet that I’m making Quasartico evil lol, Serena is ✨paranoid and traumatized✨
It really does and this is a fantastic fic idea.
Also please know all my jokes and snide remarks are in good fun as well, not bashing Urbain or ZA, kek.

I have to say, one chapter in an I am hooked. I think a first chapters job is to have enough of some intrigue to capture the reader to keep going and it definitely did that for me! The prose and narration are very flavorful and characterful. The wit and humor really landed for me, blending some dry sardonic attitudes, sarcasm and other quips without feeling too grating or clashing.

I also found you did a wonderful job with Serena and Urbain and their dynamic. It's quite hard to sell me on crushes generally, but I think they had fun banter and chemistry with each other in a way thats more engaging than traditional giggling and blushing. I also really enjoy the bits between Serena and AZ and I'm quite looking forward to more of that! I think its really nice that AZ had a friend in Serena, even if he was being silly and stubborn and refused to accept her help.

Also the glimpses of Serena's trauma are juicy and I can't wait for more. Love me some stuff showing that the protags of previous games are and absolutely would be traumatized by that.... which reminds me??? Oh my GOSH how will she react when she learns that Lysandre- er, I mean L is alive?? That's gonna rock her world. oh dear. Also look lets all be honest, L is a completely different character from Lysandre in my head :P.
Anyways so far things are mostly by the beat for the games, but much more entertaining thanks to Serena being OP, so I imagine there won't be a ton of battles at first. Which if so, would be kinda nice, not everything needs to be a power struggle.

Good fic, can't wait to revisit this!
 

K_S

Unrepentent Giovanni and Rocket fan
Hi, tango reced your story so here we are.

Happy blitz



A More Beautiful Lumiose

Chapter 1



“...No order is too tall when you have our esteemed owner at the helm! Choose Hotel Z for your next stay in Lumiose!”

“Hotel Z is the best hotel in Lumiose! No order is too
tall when…”

“Hotel Z is the…”

“Hotel Z…”


Serena let the video that had randomly popped up on her feed loop continuously, unable to tear her eyes away as she failed to comprehend what she was seeing.

Gotta admit Serena's gof a point. The video sounds as non-sensial as those old animal crossing "come to our island" blurbs they had back in the day...

After about the 15th time the video had played, Serena scrambled to check the profile of the poster, nearly dropping her Rotom Phone in the process, and accidentally knocking her coffee cup off the counter. It shattered on the ground, hot coffee and porcelain spattering everywhere, but Serena didn’t even glance at it.

The username was “hotelzlumiose” with the display name “Hotel Z - Lumiose City.” The account had several other short promotional videos, all only racking up single digit views, though one notably stood out for having a whopping 25 views. However, now that Serena thought about it, that was the video she’d been letting play over and over again.

The youtuber is going to be stoked.. until they realize it was one viewer and then they will assume that the poor smuxk fell asleep at the computer or something...

She promptly watched every other video on the account, eyes glued to the screen. Each video featured an admittedly very cute boy who had light blonde hair with red tips, some shots of the supposed Hotel Z, and a few Pokemon, usually some combination of a Chikorita, Totodile, and Tepig. But sometimes, and most importantly, the videos displayed the toweringly tall owner of said hotel and his Floette.

Serena had to pinch herself to make sure she wasn’t seeing things.

There was no WAY!

I'm wonder how Looker, or any of the adults in power tied up with Lysander's maddness would be respondong to this insanity. Poor professor sycamore at this point.

The hotel owner, who looked very dapper and put together, dressed nicely in a button-up vest, slacks, and a bowtie with his hair cut, tamed, and arranged in a long braid… was AZ!!

AZ, the 3,000-year-old giant homeless senile war criminal who interrupted her Champion parade, owned a HOTEL?!

AZ is going to accidentally be the star of conspiricy theroys isnt he?. After all with 3000 years to acrue funds what else does he own?

The AZ Serena had to DRAG into a clothing store to buy bespoke clothes for while he refused to accept anything “too nice” the entire outing and swore he’d never wear a suit.

Theres some shopping trama going onhere. As well as some disappintment. I can see Serena storming up to AZ going "oh now you dress nice?!" And AZ overplaying his mental decline by sheepishly trying to pull a "I dont know you" card.

While obviously knowing her, he just doesnt want to talk about the shoping trip of '22. Or think about it

But Serenas got opinions galore and doesnt seem inclined to drop it.


The AZ who wouldn’t even WALK into a hair salon with Serena and vowed he’d never touch his hair.

The AZ who REFUSED to let Serena purchase him an apartment because he didn’t want to settle down, claiming he was a life long wanderer.

The AZ who, no matter how much Serena begged him before her departure, wouldn’t get a Holo Caster to keep in touch with her, stubbornly declaring that technology was out of his depth.

THAT AZ?!

OWNED A HOTEL?!

Cue Serena foaming at the mouth.

Serena had to see this for herself in person. Because there was NO WAY she’d accept that this was real until she saw it with her own two eyes.

She’d stayed away from Kalos, as far away from Lumiose as possible in the last five years, but this was more than worth breaking her Lumiose-ban for. Serena immediately bought a ticket to Kalos for the next day.

Now, all she needed was a disguise.

Oh its going to be an over the top nightmare piece... wait until she bumps into
Amnesiac Lysandre
she's going to lose her everloving mind.


Z • ──── ᒡ◯ᵔ◯ᒢ✧ ──── • A​

Urbain’s Rotom Phone popped out of his pocket and floated in front of him. “Okay, ready to record! Now all we need is a tourist fresh off the train. Hope you three are ready for the spotlight again!”

This sounds like theyre plotting an abduction, not an enginered scene to make the hotel look good....


Chikorita, Totodile, and Tepig all made noises of agreement. They were more than ready for the spotlight! They were born ready! They wanted to be stars as much as the actual stars hung in the sky above!

And all 3 of then sound like viable partners for Serena... this will be interesting... if Serenas the main protagonist for the in game schenanigans. I have to admit it might be funnier if trainer john doe gets a starter and shes lurking in the background doing a mini freak out every few beats in the games plot...

Aka a hero of another story sort of thing...

“If we’re gonna protect Lumiose, we’ll need a bigger team!” Urbain resolved. “So let’s keep spreading the word about how great Hotel Z is. And once we get a guest who has what it takes, we’ll recruit ‘em to the cause! Now we need someone with a real “I’m a tourist” look.” Urbain watched the crowd of people exit the station, and that’s when he caught sight of her.

There was a girl who appeared to be about his age. She doesn’t look exactly like a tourist per se, but she didn’t fit in at all with the people around her.


Tips head. But thats what tourists do. Stick out. Spend money. And drive badly. Urb' has.. no clue what he's doing.. granted he's 13 so he gets a pass... but still.

She stood out, and caught Urbain’s eye immediately. She was practically sparkling with how put together she was. She wore a long open tan trench coat, a short red plaid dress, knee-high heeled brown boots, and a maroon felt hat.


I'm getting a "someone paid dlc and got the looker look" vive of of this one... it reminds me of looker a bit... the hat give Carmen Sandeigo vibes.. or perhaps Zib vibes... its an interesting look for someone failing at blending in 101...

Her long, honey-colored hair was tied in pigtails and her blue-gray eyes were tucked behind a pair of slightly cat-eyed rounded tortoiseshell glasses.

Something tickled in the back of Urbain’s head that she didn’t look quite right with glasses, but he waved it off. She was very fashionable and beautiful, sure, but there’s also something magnetic about her that’s drawing him in, and if Urbain thought that, the camera would think that too!

She screams "money" and "I picked up the first glasses I found".. but she might cause an uptick in views. Wager shes got her own team tho.


Plus, she did have a rather huge old-fashioned travel bag that did seem very touristy on its own. However, the overly large leather bag didn’t even look out of place at her side. She somehow made it work perfectly with her look.

You have bag 2x and look 2x pretty close to each other. I dont know if you want to touch that up or not but it caught my attention.
“Hey, you there!” Urbain called out to her. Attention successfully caught, she looked a bit startled at being singled out. Oops! He shouldn't have been so loud. Getting randomly screamed at in a crowd was bound to make anyone uncomfortable. Urbain walked over to her. “Just pulled into the Gare de Lumiose, am I right?” he asked lightly, with an easy smile, trying to compensate for the shock he’d given her. Urbain really wanted her to be in the promo video, so hopefully he hadn’t scared her off.

It seemed like his worries had been unfounded because her alertness melted away and her eyes widened slightly in recognition. “Oh, hey! You’re the guy from the video!” she identified.

“Y-you saw the video?!” Despite the multitude of videos Urbain had put out, being recognized on the street like this had never happened before! He’d always wished it would happen though. It would be proof that his PR ads were working. But it finally happened! And the fact that this really pretty girl was the one who did?!

“Chika?! Chik, chik!!” Chikorita disbelievingly poked Totodile and Tepig, who were equally as shocked.

“Te, pig.” Tepig muttered, overwhelmed. They were finally reaching the heights of fame they knew they were destined for! All of their secret midnight practices the three of them had while Urbain was sleeping were worth it!

The girl smiled radiantly. “Yeah! I came back to Lumiose just to stay in Hotel Z because of it.”

Urbain’s heart fluttered, and he couldn’t help himself from impulsive shouting, “REALLY?!” This was one of the best days of Urbain’s life. It wasn’t even that she was planning a trip to Lumiose and happened to see his advertisement. No. She came to Lumiose JUST to stay in Hotel Z because of HIS video!

“TOTODILE?!” Totodile screeched, eyes practically popping out of his head.

“Yes, really,” Serena confirmed playfully, very much enjoying how excited he and his Pokemon were. His joy was contagious. “I couldn’t find anywhere to book online, so I figured I’d just show up. Hopefully you’re not booked…?”

“NO!” he frantically exclaimed, reaching out his hands like he was ready to stop her as if she was about to run away. Urbain coughed to try to cover his blunder and returned his hands to his sides, attempting to somewhat look more casual. “No. We have plenty of room!!” He had to shoot down the idea that she should look anywhere else to stay but Hotel Z! “Hey, actually, I was just about to film another promo video for the hotel, do you want to be in it?”

No don't Ser'. You wont stay under cover long if you swan into an internet videoathon. You might as well wear a sign that says "champion is here".

“Sure, sounds like fun!” Serena loved being on camera, and she was completely okay with endorsing AZ’s hotel de war crimes. The mental image of the towering AZ bumbling about with a flood of guests and struggling to do customer service was too good to pass up on. Serena would absolutely slap her face on whatever ad Hotel Z was putting out.

Score! Urbain really lucked out! “I need you to look into the camera and say, “Hotel Z’s the best stay in Lumiose!” Easy, right?”

One, that is false advertizing shes never seen the building... two Urb has no idea her actual motives... this can only end badly.
Serena tilted her head, confused. “Oh, that’s it? You don’t want to spice up the promo with camera angles and effects? Sparkle cannons are always a good addition. If you don’t have that on hand, Dazzling Gleam works well instead.”

Serena might not be a director, but she’d made enough Trainer PR videos and been in countless brands advertisements and photoshoots to know a little bit about filmmaking and marketing. Serena being in the Hotel Z ad would do wonders on its own, but the video would reach even greater heights with a higher production value to snag viewer attention.

Overwhelmed customer service AZ was on the line here!

“Nah,” he waved off her suggestion, “simple is always better! We’re going for authenticity.”

Aka urb' is not putting 2 and 2 together. The ribbing he's going to take afterwards is going to be epic.

“Alright, if you say so,” Serena agreed, albeit skeptically. “Though, I really do think a Dazzling Gleam behind me would really improve the shot.” If somehow the video didn’t go viral, Serena would step in and find another way to make her very important new dream a reality.

Urbain delightedly laughed, enjoying her clear enthusiasm for his video. “I love the passion, but Hotel Z is good enough to bring in customers without all the bells and whistles. Okay, lights, camera…”

Loud music unexpectedly blasted from the nearby billboard, dominating the entire intersection and train station courtyard. The volume ensured that no one would be ignoring it.

Urbain grimaced, energy deflating, and tucked his Rotom Phone away. “Ah, shoot. We can’t film with that ad blaring in the background!”

On screen, the video opened on a middle aged woman with bleached blonde hair in a clean cut work-dress. “Welcome to Lumiose City, where people and Pokemon flourish together. My name is Jett, and I’m the CEO of Quasartico Inc. Pokemon are mysterious…”

Serena was overwhelmed by the unpleasant jarring interruption. “I can’t believe they’re allowing ads to be playing that loud in the streets! It’s ruining the city's atmosphere. What is the new mayor thinking?!”

No thoughts, just money drops. I'm surprised Serena's having an issue with it though and caring about the atmosphere. It seems a bit odd per her main goal being trolling AZ and being the best.


“I’m guessing you’ve been to Lumiose before, huh?” Urbain observed.

“Oh, yes,” Serena confirmed, trolling through the multitude of memories she had in Lumiose, the good and the bad. “Many, many times. I lived here briefly about 5 years ago.”

Urbain scrunched his eyes in a half-wince, half-smile. “Yeah, the city has changed a lot since then, especially with this new urban redevelopment plan Quasartico is rolling out. The mayor is really on board with it.”

Ah enter the gentrification plot i see. Maybe Serena is going to be main charactering it up. Wonder what side she's going to take?


“Ugh, that mayor,” Serena groaned. “I bet Clemont is more than happy to let the mayor run amok. He’s probably loving all the technology updates.”

Tuning back into the ad, Jett continued, “…that we’ve begun setting up wild zones where they can live comfortably alongside us…”

Serena stared aghast at the images on screen. “Arceus, please don’t tell me that company is wrecking any of the historic architecture to make their little habitats?!” Lumiose’s aesthetics and architecture were sacred!!

“Well…” Urbain weakly trailed off, not wanting to finish, knowing she’d hate the answer.

“That’s not a no,” she noted briskly, clicking her tongue. “The damned mayor is probably revoking the historical status of the structures just to let them do whatever they want! Oh, Lumiose, what have they done to you?” Serena wallowed in grief at the fate of this beautiful city.

I didn't peg Serena as historical appreciation nerd... but alright... you learn somthing new every page it seems...

Though it does raise the question. If she fights to get it reversed, what happens to all these new pokemon and thier habitats?

Urbain hadn’t expected her to be so opinionated on it. She really didn’t seem like the type to be anti-Pokemon. “You’re really against the wild zones. Do you not like Pokemon in the city?”

“Pokemon in the city is wonderful, they should be allowed to live wherever they like, here or otherwise,” Serena huffed. “Just don’t let companies purposefully destroy history to make that happen! It’s like replacing all of the mirrors in Parfum Palace’s Hall of Mirrors with TVs because mirrors are outdated. This is blasphemous!!” Serena will admit that she had some destruction-related trauma, but regardless, the integrity of Lumiose’s old architecture should be preserved!

Huh shes really gung-ho about this. Wondering how canonical to the base setting this is. Also amusing how Urb's first guess was anti-mon. He missed by about ten miles...


Urbain nodded, understanding her argument now. What a relief! She wasn’t anti-Pokemon, that would have been terrible! “Ah, I see what you mean. I agree with you on that one, actually.”

“They better not have touched any of the fountains or obelisks!” Serena protested fiercely, turning her attention back to the stupidly loud video to pour over the visuals and scan for crimes against history.

With a flourish, Jett announced, “We’ve now employed our patented holo-tech in all corners of Lumiose so our interactive guides can teach you more about your surroundings…”

‘Holo-tech… Wait, did they buy out Lysandre Labs’ patents? They were allowed to do that?!’
Serena faltered, her disgust over design choices quickly fading into extreme suspicion of Quasartico. Her eyes widened, horrified. ‘Oh no, their technology is already everywhere in the city!’

As if the woman had prepared her next words specifically for Serena, Jett declared, “A city even more beautiful than before awaits all of us.”

Serena felt like this CEO– Jett was looking directly into her soul, her eyes now filled with a heavy presence far greater than any pre-recorded billboard ad should have been able to convey.

This CEO is gibing off lysandre vibes. Too intent, earth shaming goal (granted in one local and more historical based but still damaging to the base frame work of a society/town ect) and a love of modern tech.

Forget meeting SPOILER Serena's going to take damage from seeing those adds too often.


‘Not even 10 minutes back in Lumiose and there’s another charismatic CEO trying to change the world to make it more beautiful with a holo-tech agenda.’ Serena had seen this play out before. It haunted her every night. It was why she couldn’t find it in her to stay in Kalos.

Serena wished she wouldn’t get involved, but she knew that she couldn’t just leave Kalos to suffer a horrible fate again. No way. She refused. Serena didn’t want to keep playing the hero, but she’d be damned if she didn’t take action when she knew she could do something.

Especially since this only happened in the first place because Serena left Kalos and fled to Hoenn. Serena had been ignoring her league duties, just doing the bare minimum to keep her title, enjoying the fame without the responsibility, and had purposefully abstained from being involved with Kalos’ affairs. Had Serena been more watchful and present, she could have stopped this mess before it was approved.

Before it was everywhere in the city.

Yeah good luck prying out that infestation. Its going to be a doozy. And i imagine most the tech is mon attack proofed after the thrashing Lysabdre's bases/tech got from the last adventure.


This happened because of her negligence. Because Serena couldn’t cope with what had happened to her and had to leave to get away from all the reminders, especially in Lumiose. Because Serena couldn’t get over having the fate of the world rest on her shoulders. Couldn’t rationalize the many, many attempts on her and her Pokemon’s lives at the hands of Team Flare.

I mean trauma is a legit reason to nope out of responsibility while one heals. Its just a shame that Ser' hasn't licked this yet as i suspect its going to get uglier as it goes.


With knowing that if she failed or made one small mistake, all life on the planet would end.

And it would have been her fault.

Because she wasn’t able to deal with seeing a man and his Pokemon crushed to death. Because of her.

Serena had only been 13. She shouldn’t have been expected to cope or be responsible for any of that! She was just a child! The adults in the region should have stepped up and taken care of it like they were supposed to!

Diantha, Sycamore, the gym leaders, everyone! They all failed her.

No. Serena refused to be just another oblivious Champion who thrust their responsibility onto some unsuspecting, hopeful child.

Serena would deal with her mess herself.

It was time to step up and start taking her role as Champion seriously.

Wrapping up the advertisement, Jett politely concluded, “We hope you’ll bear that in mind and pardon our construction work.” The screen faded into Quasartico’s logo. “The Mega Evolution of Lumiose City is coming, brought to you by Quasartico Inc.”

Snirts. Really a megaevolution pun of that level. W9nder if Serena can hear my groans of irritation from beyond the fourth wall from here.

‘Oh, I’m bearing that beautiful future you want in mind greatly, Quasartico. Message received loud and clear, don’t worry.’ Serena narrowed her eyes, glaring daggers at the billboard and crossing her arms. ‘And no, you’re not excused for the construction work. It’s tacky. Do better.’

Serena had immediately noticed the scaffolding as soon as she left the train station doors. Well, that and the newly retrofitted anti-homeless benches. The scaffolding was just that jarring of a contrast from the buildings that immediately stood out! It was garish, ugly, and didn’t match the Lumiose aesthetic at all!! It got a big no, no, no, NO from her!

Personally the anti homeless features rankle more than the scaffolding. They dont have spikes or bars stabbing into people who need spa e to relx. I imagine thr up and coming trainers who dont have enough for an inn/hostel/pokecenter might start avoiding Lum' as a result.

“I like how that CEO thinks,” Urbain commended. “Even if her ad did keep us from filming. This city and its Pokemon are a wonder. To know ‘em is to love ‘em! Anyone who visits gets it.”

Calem’s interactions with Lysandre unwillingly flashed in Serena’s mind. “Lumiose and its Pokemon are special, there’s no doubt about that. I won’t let anyone,” she hardened her stare at the billboard, “try to ruin that.”

Not really clocking her ire and only noting her intensity, Urbain tucked his hands behind his head and grinned. “See? You get it! And speaking of people who visit Lumiose, the new promo video is gonna convince them to give Hotel Z a shot! You’re proof it’s already working!”

“Is Hotel Z struggling to get guests?” Serena asked.

“Er, yeah,” Urbain reluctantly admitted, “That’s why I’m doing all the promo videos, you know? Gotta help get new guests somehow.”

Serena raised an eyebrow. “Well, you don’t have a website or a place to book online. You’re not exactly making it easy for people to reach out to you to book a room,” she bluntly evaluated. She had thought the lack of online presence was an attempt to look exclusive, not because of incompetence.

If only Urb' could hear her thoughts, he'd wither away and the hotel would need more staff to pick up the slack.

Urbain’s energy shrunk. It was a harsh but very fair point. “I’ve tried to get the hotel owner to agree to a website, but he says he won’t do it. Something about being out of touch with new technology,” he defended.

Serena sighed. “Of course he did,” she muttered under her breath.

I mean, fair point. He is over 3000 thats senior citizen times (gets calculator) fifty.

“What was that?”

“Nothing,” Serena dismissed. “Anyways, just put me in whatever PR video you wanted to make, and people will flock to the hotel.” It looked like she’d have to forcefully make AZ finally adapt to modern technology.

“Wow, that’s some confidence you have there!” Urbain cheered. “I like it! It’s just the energy we need for the video!”

Serena blinked, genuinely perplexed. “…Do you really not recognize me?” Yes, she was wearing a disguise – a trenchcoat and fake glasses – but it was intended for people to not notice her at a glance. It was a tactic to avoid being crowded. Serena had figured it wouldn’t work for people that spent more than a few minutes looking at her.

“No…? Should I…?” Urbain hesitated. “I mean, you’re pretty enough to be famous, yeah, but I don’t recognize you at all.”

Ironically, from behind Urbain, the billboard that had so graciously delivered the previous message from hell flickered into an ad featuring Serena herself advertising a new fashion line.

Serena glanced up and down between the billboard and Urbain in disbelief. “Wow, okay. This disguise really is working.”

“Oh, are you actually famous then and trying to go incognito?” Urbain wondered.

Serena now found the whole unknown identity thing very amusing. “Yes, something like that.”

“Got it!” Urbain raised a finger in front of lips to make a “shh” gesture like he was keeping a secret. “We’ll be super inconspicuous then. Very low key.” He bowed, one arm across his middle, and the other arm out to the side. “Only the most secret of escorts to the hotel for the lady in disguise.” He winked at her.

He still has no ckue, doesn't he? Wheres Serena's star team member from her champion line up? That might help him figure it out...

Serena was momentarily stunned. ‘He’s kind of an idiot, but why is this actually so charming?! That should have been cringy, so why is this working for him?!’

Urbain smirked at her unbalanced state. “Let me take your bag… Hold up – where’d your bag go?” He looked around, wondering if she’d dropped it somewhere.

“Huh? I could have sworn…” Serena cursed that she’d been momentarily distracted because of a suave line. She was better than that! She still had her go-to pink tote with all her Pokemon, but her luggage bag was gone.

‘Of course, now I’ve been mugged. Just my luck. Welcome back to Kalos, Serena! Have some evil agendas you get to deal with, an ugly scaffolding-chic Lumiose, and a side of robbery.’ Serena groaned disparagingly at her fate. ‘This is really not my day.’

“Hey!” Urbain shouted. “That Pancham’s got it!” He pointed to the Pokemon in question.

A Pancham danced merrily, bouncing from foot to foot, Serena’s bag hoisted over one of her shoulders, flaunting her grab in their faces. She stuck her tongue out at them and pulled down on her lower eyelid. Pancham blew a raspberry, the leaf in her mouth whistling so the noise sounded like a mocking “toot,” and her taunting expression all but said, “Hahah! Suckers! You’re all idiots!”

“The nerve!!” Serena stomped her foot in frustration, hands fisted by her side.

“Did you hire a Pokemon courier service or something?” Urbain obliviously asked.

I think Serena's being too optimistic here. Charming? I'd vote first to recieve a darwin award.

Serena looked up to the sky as if the clouds above would give her the grace to handle this situation with. “Arceus, you’re lucky you’re pretty. No!” she exclaimed, meeting his eyes. “What about that looked like it was planned?!”

Urbain blushed. “You think I’m pretty?” he said bashfully.

Serena deadpanned, “Is that really what you took away from what I just said?” She pinched her nose, exasperated. “That Pancham stole my bag!”

Urbain, finally clued into what was happening, leaned back, bringing his hands up in front of him in shock. “Wait… so your bag got bagnapped?!” He grimaced, looking away and scratching the back of his head, regretful. “I shouldn’t have bugged you with my video stuff… My bad! Come on, I’ll help you get your bag back!” Urbain took off running after the Pancham. Great! He messed up again! Way to be smooth, Urbain! He had to make it right by returning her bag.

“Thank you!” Serena exclaimed, happy that he was getting with the program. Serena easily matched his pace, running beside him.

“Quick! After that Pokemon!” Urbain commanded his three Pokemon. They scampered ahead. The Pancham made an evasive move to cut down a corner street. “It went into that alley there! Man, that thing can hustle!”

“I see it!” Serena started sprinting, outpacing Urbain, heels clacking rapidly along the cobblestones.

Surprised Ser isnt tossing down a team member to close the distance...

“You know, you run really fast despite wearing heeled boots!” Urbain marveled, impressed.

“Please,” Serena scoffed, “as if I would stumble while wearing designer shoes!” she screamed, outraged at the thought.

Urbain muffled a laugh. It was cute that being frustrated made her snarky and less composed. “It went left just before that dead end!”

The Pancham stopped. Serena and Urbain paused their chase and watched from around the corner as the Pancham reunited with and showed off his haul to two Trainers.

“I guess this wasn’t just a wild Pokemon randomly messing with you. That bag-napping Pancham must’ve been with those two.” Urbain turned to Serena. “Listen– oh, hey, actually what’s your name?” Urbain glanced away, embarrassed. “Sorry, I should have asked you earlier. Just kinda got caught up in everything.”

“It’s fine, I didn’t exactly ask for your name either. I’m Serena, and you are?” She introduced herself, morbidly wondering when exactly he would clue into realizing who she was.

“Serena? Got it. That’s a nice name! I’m Urbain.” He gave her a close-eyed beaming smile Serena would have been dazzled by if not for her fixating on the sheer lack of recognition even after having her name. Urbain was clearly still completely clueless. Was her disguise just that good or was he just the oblivious-earnest type? Serena figured it was probably both. “And don’t you worry – I’ve got your back here!”

“Even a backpacker like me wouldn’t be caught dead with a bag this tacky!” one of the Trainers with Pancham stressed, repulsed by the bag.

“Maybe it was trying to clean up this eyesore,” the other Trainer suggested, trying to reason why Pancham stole such an ugly bag. “Let’s bring it to the cops! Bet they’ll pat us on the back.”

“YOU TAKE THAT BACK!” Serena screeched, scandalized. Her sheer indignation at the slight dominating any need to be sneaky. She stormed over to the two Trainers. “It is vintage Boutique Couture! But I guess a backpacker like you wouldn’t appreciate high fashion.”

“So what if it costs a lot!” the backpacker fumed. “It’s still ugly!!”

Affronted, Serena was ready to charge her. “WHY YOU–”

“No need to take it to the police guys,” Urbain quickly interrupted, trying to defuse the situation but very amused by Serena’s sudden personality shift. Her very put-together air crumbled when she got upset! “If you haven’t gotten the memo yet, she’s the owner of the bag, just give it back to her.”

Serena backed off with a huff and crossed her arms. No, she was not pouting.

“HEY!! You’re Urbain!!” the backpacker shouted, surprised, but not exactly happy to see him.

Serena was baffled that someone recognized Urbain like he was a big deal when she was standing right there next to him completely anonymous! This disguise was really putting in work! The glasses were definitely worth the exorbitant price tag!

“I… can’t say I know you. Did you see one of the ads I filmed, maybe?” Urbain asked wishfully.

Serena thought it was precious that he sounded so hopeful that his video ads might have been circulating enough for two people to have recognized him today.

The backpacker shook her head, offended and shocked Urbain didn’t remember her. “It’s me, Andi! From the Z-A Royale! How could you forget already?!”

“Yeah, I’m Andre!” the other Trainer jumped in. “We faced off just last night!”

This amusing interaction isnt detracting at all from my attention that Ser's stuff is still missong. However it seems like Ser and Urb' share the same attwntion soan ppint, and that point went out to lunch... snickers.

Urbain put his hands on his hips and looked down his nose at them, haughty. “Oh, Trainers from last night? Sorry, not ringing a bell. Must not have been much of a challenge.” No, he was definitely NOT being extra rude because they brutally crushed his dreams of being recognized twice today from his hotel videos!

Andi looked humiliated. “That stings. But I guess… fair.”

Serena, positively gleeful that Urbain was joining her dissing these two, was encouraged to continue poking at them. “No eye for fashion and weak trainers? Please, what do you even have going for you at that point?” She flipped her hair over her shoulder, smirking at them like they were nothing more than peasants huddled outside her castle.

Infuriated, Andre announced, “Listen up! We’ll return your bag – if you battle us right now!”

Urbain shook his head, confused. “That makes no sense. If you want a rematch, all you have to do is wait till nightfall.”

And we are getting a game mechanic in text format? Interesting. Still bafled as to why Ser' is playing by that rule though...

“SHUT UP!” Andre spat. “Pancham’s itching for another shot at you. That’s why it snagged the bag! Uh, probably!”

“It’s nice of you to consider what Pancham wants.” Serena hated that Urbain said that earnestly. Really, Urbain was lucky he was pretty because he was too understanding that it circled right back around to being gullible! “But the two of you against me? That’s unfair!”

Serena was more than ready to throw down. If he thought it was unfair now, she was about to swing that wildly in the other direction.

Urbain turned to Serena, looking a little regretful. “Listen. How about I guide you through this mess? I’m just a helpful kind of guy, you see. Your bag got stolen, right? So what’s your next step here?”

Serena clenched her manicured hand into a fist in front of her. “Crush them with no mercy! They will pay for their crimes against fashion.”

“Er, yeah,” Urbain faltered, though he was internally laughing at her extreme ferocity. “Love to see your priorities are in order. And you’ve got three Pokemon right here ready to help!”

“Whatever, just hurry up or it’ll be night anyway!” Andi stated impatiently.

“Hear that? They’re down!” Urbain gestured to his own three Pokemon. “Now choose which Pokemon you’ll battle with!”

“Thanks for the offer, but there’s no need.” Serena grinned ferally. “I am a Trainer, and I’ve got a full team with me.” These fools were in for a shock!

“Great! You’ll be able to handle this no problem!” Urbain cheered.

“How much longer are you gonna drag your feet?” Andi barked.

Serena clicked her tongue. “Oh, I’m more than ready to battle.” She patted the imaginary creases on her outfit. Serena reached into her tote and pulled out a Pokeball.

“All that waiting drained my momentum. Time to get back into gear! No way I’m gonna get beat by a prissy fashionista like you! You’re going down!” Andi taunted. “Pancham gave us a shot at revenge, and we won’t miss!”

“I respect that spirit. But you’re gonna have egg on your face for real if you lose after that declaration!” Urbain shook his head, skeptical.

“Hey!” Andre shouted, feeling ignored. “Focus up, Urbain – you’re dealing with me!”

“Right,” Urbain rolled his eyes, putting his hands on his hips. “I’m sure you got muuuuch stronger in the day since I beat you!” His abundant sarcasm indicated just how much of a threat Urbain thought this Trainer was.

Serena cackled. Urbain might be a gullible idiot, but he was a cute gullible idiot with an edge. She was very much a fan of the unexpected sass!

“Go, Pancham!” The backpacker’s cry caused Serena to refocus on her own battle.

Pancham was brimming with confidence and a self-satisfied glee that the situation she’d arranged for was bearing exactly the fruit she wanted! Revenge!!!

“Sensei, show them who's in charge!” Serena sent out her beloved partner who’d been with her since day one. There was no one better to thoroughly trounce this Pancham than her perfect grossly overpowered Greninja.

Sensei emerged from his Pokeball. Aided by the sunset’s back lighting, the Greninja’s looming shadow stretched far away from his form and completely covered the Pancham, making Sensei appear even larger and intimidating than he already was. Sensei glared menacingly down at the Pancham, red eyes glowing in the dusk low-light.

Pancham suddenly regretted all of the choices she’d made leading to this moment. She messed up. Big time. That was not a normal Greninja!! NO WAY! What was that thing eating!? The souls of the damned?!

“A Greninja?!” Andi exclaimed. “Whatever, Pancham and I can take you! Pancham, use Tackle!”

Sensei stared at Pancham with a questioning look that read, “You sure about that, buddy?”

Ice ran through Pancham’s veins. Tackle? Please! Like that would do anything to that Greninja. No, she was NOT fighting that thing! Pancham decided to be smart about this and ran back to her Trainer, grabbed the bag she stole, and delicately placed it next to the horror-Greninja’s Trainer. Pancham darted back behind her Trainer’s legs for protection, holding on tight and shivering.

“Pancham??” Andi questioned sharply.

Smart Pancham. I suspect shes the smartest in the room. Brownie points to her.

Serena, extremely satisfied by Pancham’s groveling, felt like this was an even better outcome than winning. “Look, we don’t have to battle. Your Pancham returned my bag, and she clearly doesn’t want to fight anymore. Don’t force her to battle because of some petty problem you have with Urbain. That’s not fair to Pancham.” Serena might be being a little tiny bit of an asshole with this whole battle, but she would never force a Pokemon to battle her that didn’t want to.

“Fine!” Andi relented. “I hate to admit it, but you’re right. This was supposed to make US feel better, not you! Your Greninja is really something else though. You’re fresh off the train, but you’re no newbie, are you?”

Serena snorted. “No, I’m not. Sensei and I have been together for six years now. Did the league circuit and all that.” She gave Sensei a nod and returned him to his Pokeball.

“We really didn’t stand a chance did we?” Andi stated glumly.

“That was some unconventional battle! I’ve never seen a Pokemon get knocked out from Mean Look before!” Urbain mocked, walking over casually from his own complete trouncing of a battle he’d dished out.

“Please tell me you won, Andre!” Andi asked desperately.

“Nope.” Andre hung his head in shame. “Can’t believe I thought I’d score a next-day comeback. My Pokemon and I are so let down.”

Andi reassuringly put her hand on Andre’s shoulder. “This is why you and I get along so well. We even lose together.”

“If you’re that upset, wait till night falls and come try again!” Urbain said good-naturedly with a grin.

“No way! We’re not dealing with you again – not even if we meet during the Royale!” Andi vowed. “Pancham says sorry about the bag. Now au revoir!” The two trainers and Pancham abruptly made their escape.

Urbain raised his hand out for a fist bump towards Serena. At her lack of returning the gesture, he said, “Don’t leave me hanging!”

Serena blinked. “Oh.” She fist bumped him back. Was that a thing in Lumiose now?

“That was huge! We won our first battle side by side! We make a great team, the real makings of a great power duo!” Urbain declared, pumping his fists by his side.

Snorts. Thats one way to look at it. And i see in leaving 'chan passed the braincell back to Ser' its going to be a heavy burden in this company, i can tell.

“We did. Next time, let’s have a proper double battle!” she agreed. Urbain might not be at the same level as her battle-prowess wise, but that didn’t matter. He was a dynamic character that would definitely bring some interesting strategies when working as a team! It would be fun!

“So there’s gonna be a next time then, huh?” Urbain grinned impishly and folded his hands behind his head.

Not going to allow herself to be caught off-foot again, Serena confidently agreed, “Yeah, there’s going to be a next time for sure. That is, if you can keep up with me.”

“Then I’ll train extra hard to make that next time happen!” he whooped, determined to get even stronger.

Without warning, red pillars of light materialized around them.

“Oh man. It’s nightfall already?” Urbain scratched his head worriedly, darting his eyes around him in every direction. “And here we are in a battle zone. Rotten luck.”

“Am I missing something here? What’s happening?” She was puzzled. Serena looked at the red holo-walls with disdain. “I didn’t expect their holo-tech to be this pervasive.”

“We gotta move, so here’s the deal, super-short version… Battle zones are intense! Anyone who finds you in here can challenge you to a battle on the spot!” he cautioned. “I know I said I’d give you a low key trek to the hotel, sorry about this.” Urbain cursed to himself. This was about the least inconspicuous thing that could have happened! First the bag-napping, now this! “I’ll make it up to you, I promise.”

“No, this is in no way your fault. Please, don’t worry unnecessarily over it,” Serena reassured. “Besides, it doesn’t sound that bad based on what you said. But honestly, I’d rather not battle any more tonight. I’m severely jet lagged, and would prefer to get a head start on getting readjusted to the time zone.”

“Gotcha, Hotel Z is right nearby. Let’s get going! My Pokemon here can take care of your bag so it won’t weigh you down.” Urbain gestured to Tepig and Chikorita. “Totodile will stay with me, just in case.”

Serena raised an eyebrow. “You sure? My bag already got stolen once by Pokemon today.”

“Nah, they’ll be fine! Other Pokemon will leave ‘em alone. Plus, those two can climb fences and get into places where people can’t follow ‘em.” Urbain was very confident in his Pokemon’s ability to handle the task.

“Alright.” She squatted down to hand the bag to the two. “You both look very brave and strong, please do your best to ensure my bag makes it to the hotel safely. I’ll make sure to reward you handsomely if you do.”

Chikorita and Tepig puffed their chests out in pride, now taking this courier job much more seriously. They accepted the bag with great care and bounded off.

From beside Urbain, Totodile pouted, feeling left out. “Toh, toh…”

Serena noticed the Pokemon’s dour mood. “Don’t worry, Totodile, you’re getting the hardest job out of you three! You have to make sure we make it to the hotel safely. Urbain must have chosen you to stay because you’re the strongest.”

Totodile peered up at her, eyes sparkling, and turned to Urbain for confirmation.

Urbain faltered, not really expecting Totodile's puppy eyes. “Uh, what–” Serena gave him a firm look, silently screaming at him not to crush his Pokemon’s dreams. “Oh, yeah. Yeah! You’re so strong, Totodile! There’s no one else I’d trust with our safety more!”

“Tohto, toh, to!!” Totodile burst with life, very excited to play his role now. “Toh!”

“We gotta hightail it outta this battle zone. Follow me! Totodile, you stick close to the front to guard!”

“Toto!” Totodile affirmed seriously.

“This way!” Urbain guided as he started running, leading the group towards the exit. Serena trailed behind, following his lead as they made several turns down alleyways. “Okay, we’re almost there.”

“What have we got here?” Serena whipped around, startled by the waitress’ sudden voice from behind her. “A pair of battle zone loiterers! You must be after a Pokemon battle. So square up and give me your best shot!”

Remembering the last battle he just saw of hers, Urbain winced. “Uhhh, I wouldn’t challenge her if I were you! And anyways, my friend here isn’t part of–”

“I don’t believe anyone asked you!” the waitress snapped at him, cutting him off.

Urbain covered his eyes with his hand and shook his head slightly. “Hey, I tried.”

Serena waved off Urbain’s concern. “I appreciate the effort. I might be dead tired, but I can pull through one battle.” She would gladly deal with this rude woman.

The waitress flipped her pony tail over her shoulder and glared at Serena. “The points I earn from trouncing you will propel me up the ranks!” Riding high and confident, she sent out the cutest smallest bean of a Cleffa.

The bean let out the most adorable squeaking war cry as she raised her little baby sized arms up to try to be ferocious, “Cleee!” The Cleffa was possibly the tiniest Cleffa Serena had ever seen with the biggest doe eyes. The sheer size of its eyes made it look even smaller.

Its got passive cute look 24/7 with thar build. Will Sen' be willing to trounce something that tiny tho that is the question?

“Oh, no,” Urbain muttered under his breath, horrified. “That poor Cleffa.” He had seen just how powerful Serena’s Greninja was. She was clearly a very experienced Trainer. More than experienced. She was undoubtedly a veteran Trainer.

The Cleffa was about to go down, hard.

Serena turned her head to Urbain, face stricken. “Actually, I don’t know if I can do this. I mean, morally.” That might have been the most baby looking Pokemon ever. Did it hatch, like, an hour ago with pre-programed maximum adorable genes?!

This was NOT the same as battling that Pancham!

“Shut up!! Send out your Pokemon already!” the waitress grumbled.

“Clef!!” Cleffa looked equally as irritated, glaring at Serena with her perfect shiny doll-eyes. She curled her little arms up in a “come at me” gesture and started shadow boxing. This Cleffa really did perfectly match her Trainer.

“Arceus, please don’t send me to hell for this.” Serena quickly ran through the mental math of who had the least damaging move on her team and who could be the gentlest. Shit, no one on her team was particularly gentle! But if she had to choose… “Go Gattaca!” Her Sylveon emerged in a shower of sparkles. “Please, please, please don’t kill the Cleffa!” Serena begged desperately.

“Syl?” Gattaca had the audacity to look confused by the direction.

Alright this line sounds like theres a history. Has gattaca killed before? Is there a stash of dead fluff balls somewhere in mr. Ribbons history? Inquirong minds and alll that...

“Cleffa, use Tackle!”

“Uh,” Serena stuttered, unsure of how to handle a battle for the first time in years. “Gattaca, just- just tap it lightly with one of your ribbons, okay? Like 5%- no 2% power!” Serena pinched two of her fingers together to emphasize just how small she meant.

“Syl!” Gattaca nodded in confirmation.

“Oh, thank Arceus,” Serena sighed in relief that Gattaca understood.

The little Cleffa came charging in at the Sylveon, armed with a confidence of a thousand burning suns, and about to execute the most epic Tackle of her life. “Cle–”

Gattaca, as instructed, used one of her ribbons to bat Cleffa away, sending it rocketing at high speeds before it slammed into the side of the nearby building with a loud resounding crack and a cloud of dust. Debris fell from the point of contact on the wall.

Due to her round body, Cleffa bounced off the building and bopped along the street, like a bouncy ball slowly losing momentum, until she skidded, face down on the pavement, to a stop back in front of the Sylveon.

Cleffa was bruised, battered, and most notably not moving.

“Syl~ve!!” Gattaca trilled merrily over the defeated limp body of her enemy. She did an excellent job!

“C…le…f….” Cleffa weakly and painfully mumbled, barely audible.

Oh, thank Arceus, it wasn’t dead! Serena hid her face in her hands. Gattaca did NOT understand!! That was way too much power! She should have never trusted her to be gentle!!!

“CLEFFA!” her Trainer yelped, the worry and panic clear in her voice, rushing over and dropping to her knees in front of the downed Pokemon. Serena hurriedly dug into her purse.

“I am SO sorry!!! Please use this Max Revive!” Serena shoved the Max Revive into the waitress’ hands who administered it promptly.

Though now out of danger, the Cleffa was still very woozy and looked worse for wear. The waitress returned Cleffa to her Pokeball. She had her Bunnelby as well, but wasn’t going to risk their health too. “Another night spent battling in the Z-A Royale with no points to show for it…” she muttered.

Lady your priorities. Love how Ser is like "no murder" and mr. Fairy is all like "i brought the knives!"...
Wonder about the rest of her team tho if theyre all that o.p.

“Um, ma’am, you need to take your Cleffa to a Pokemon Center immediately!” Serena pressed, genuinely worried about the health of Cleffa.

“I tried to tell you!” Urbain shook his head, also looking stricken. “And Serena’s right! You need to leave, now!”

“Toto! To, dile!” Totodile insisted, just as upset.

Coming to her senses and snapping out of her shock-riddled brain, the waitress scrambled back to her feet. “R-Right!!” she darted off, sprinting.

Urbain watched as she left, unable to tear his eyes away from Cleffa’s Pokeball. “Honestly? I think I heard it pop like a balloon when it hit that wall.”

“I’m going to have nightmares about this,” Serena said solemnly, eyes distant.

“Syl~ve~on~!” Gattaca chimed with a little dance, wiggling her ribbons and tail, cheering herself on for her good work of utterly destroying that precious little angel.

Seriously Gat' is the poster child for the "murder is okay" meme.

“No!! You don’t get to be happy about that!” Serena spat, pointing at Gattaca accusingly. “I trusted you to be nice!!”

“Ve,” the Sylveon scoffed and gave her a look that said, “I WAS nice!”

“Hey.” Urbain caught Serena’s attention. “So here’s my advice as your kind new friend who loves helping people…” Even though his evaluation of himself was true, it sounded incredibly sarcastic. “Stay out of the battle zones.”

“Yeah, no SHIT!” Serena exclaimed, the most frazzled she’d been all day. She glared at Gattaca and returned her to her Pokeball.

“Let’s get the hell out of here before someone else comes after us looking for a battle!” Urbain shuddered. “I don’t think I could handle watching another repeat of Cleffa.”

As they continued to make their way out of the battle zone, their path was blocked once again. Three Trainers stood just in front of the exit, all itching for a battle and sights trained on Urbain and Serena.

Urbain worriedly glanced off to the side, scratching the back of his head, and unsure of how to proceed.

“Thank Arceus it’s not another Cleffa,” Serena breathed in relief at the sight of the Honedge, Pansear, and Hearacross. All opponents she was completely morally okay with dispatching ruthlessly and were decidedly not newborn baby adorable beans.

“Look,” Urbain started, hoping this time he could resolve this with words. “I’m trying to get our hotel guest to safety. Let us through, would you?” He gestured to Serena beside him, then held his hands up in a placating gesture.

The battle girl uncrossed her arms and sneered, “Too bad for your guest! Once you step into a battle zone, you’re a target like everyone else!”

Urbain unceremoniously dropped his arms down by his side and looked defeated. No, he steeled himself, Urbain couldn’t allow another Cleffa to happen. Never again.

“If you want a target,” Urbain walked in front of Serena, “I’m right here!” He dropped into a battle ready stance.

“Toto.” Totodile matched his Trainer’s determination.

“Kyururu!” a Pokemon cry came from above. Serena and Urbain looked up, following the noise. Floette gracefully floated down between the two parties preparing for battle. When she raised her flower that had been blocking her view, Floette chirped excitedly upon seeing Serena.

“A Floette with a black flower, huh?” the jogger Trainer commented sharply. “You don’t see that every day. Let’s see how it battles!”

Floette looked over her shoulder back at the other Trainers and glared at them. How dare they interrupt her reunion with Serena! She swung her flower around and started to charge up a Light of Ruin, the only appropriate response to such a slight!

“NO! Don’t hit them!” Urbain reached out frantically, desperately trying to prevent another Cleffa incident.

Fine. Floette pouted. Urbain always ruined her fun. She fired off her blinding cannon of a move juuuust above the three trainers heads and into the sky above. Floette reveled in seeing the beam’s light flicker away against the night sky.

There was a moment of silence before the three Trainers glanced at each other, then stumbled over themselves to scramble away, fleeing as fast as they could. Floette cackled. Urbain had been right! That was much funnier than actually hitting them with Light of Ruin!

Floette turned back around to face Urbain and Serena, ready for praise.

“Nicely done, Floette!” Urbain, so very relieved it didn’t turn into another Cleffa situation, was completely fine with not saying anything about Floette’s almost murder. “But maybe you should save that Light of Ruin move for when it really counts, huh?” he commented instead with a slight laugh.

Floette stubbornly puffed out her cheeks. That wasn’t what she was looking for.

“Floette!” Serena greeted her cheerfully. “That was some crazy power! You must have been training hard!”

Serena seems to just draw murder happy mon. Tho i suspect this one might be AZ's..


“Kryu!” Floette trilled happily at the acknowledgement. She floated around Serena while preening and moving her flower about like a sword. “Ku, ruru.” Yes, Floette had been training, thank you for noticing.

“Woah, Floette really likes you!” Urbain marveled.

“And I really like Floette! Your flower looks extra pretty today! It must be basking in the glow of that Light of Ruin you just fired!” Serena complemented. Floette twirled her flower bashfully with a blush. There was a reason why Serena was her favorite. She then floated up to sit on Serena’s head. Floette pointed excitedly with her flower towards the hotel.

Serena chuckled. “Of course, m’lady, as your loyal steed, I shall lead you wherever you please! Order away!”

“Kryuuuu~!”

“You’re really good with Pokemon,” Urbain noted, watching their easy exchange. “Hey, how long did you say you’re staying in Lumiose?” Serena was definitely the kind of person he wanted on Team MZ!

“Thank you. I’m not quite sure, I haven’t exactly booked a return ticket yet.” Serena had new, fun, and exciting megalomaniacs to deal with first before she decided where to settle down in Kalos again.

Urbain smiled softly, meeting Serena’s gaze. “So what you’re saying is that there’s a chance I could convince you to stay longer?”

‘Why is he so charming?!’ Serena screamed in her head. The line had come out of nowhere! He can’t just say something like that casually!

Tickled by the exchange, Floette leaned down from her perch to pat Serena’s face, snapping her out of it.

“I mean,” Serena bumbled out an answer, “I don’t have any plans yet so…”

Urbain beamed and did a small victory jump. “I’ll take it! A chance is all I’ll need!” Wow, this boy was NOT good for her heart! “You’ll see. Besides, once you see how great Hotel Z is, you’ll never want to leave!”

“Hotel Z, right,” Serena weakly tried to pivot. “Let’s go there.”

“Great!” Urbain’s 10,000 kilowatt smile was still going strong. “Follow me! I don’t think I’ve ever been more relieved to leave a battle zone.”

After exiting the red holo-gateway, Hotel Z was only a few paces away. The building was an exemplary example of old Lumiose architecture, complete with the cobble stone courtyard and climbing ivy.

“Welcome to our humble establishment,” Urbain bowed as if he was a butler and looked up at Serena from under his eyelashes cheekily, “Hotel Z! You won’t find a more tranquil, relaxing stay anywhere in Lumiose…” Urbain’s confidence faltered, wincing as he trailed off. “Because we don’t have a single other guest,” he finished ruefully.

Serena smiled warmly at Urbain. “A tranquil, relaxing stay is just what I’m looking for,” she announced primly.

He chuckled. “Great! Come on in!” Urbain held the door open for her. “After you.”

“Thank you.” She looked around the lobby, it really had that wonderful rustic cozy feeling. She couldn’t help but smile upon seeing the patchwork sewn curtains and the mis-matched chairs. This space had AZ written all over it. Serena loved it. Floette left her spot on Serena’s head and drifted back to AZ.

“I’m back, AZ!” Urbain called out, entering after her, and letting the door close. He met AZ at the counter. “Check it out – I brought us a guest!”

Serena withheld the snort she wanted to make upon seeing the giant of a man in the flesh wearing his dapper little suit manning the comically short reception desk. With his color pallet, bangs, and bow tie he looked exactly like a Dartrix! Imagine a Rowlett in a tiny bell hop uniform and hat!!! Aaah!! She needed to make that happen and get her hands on a few Rowlett for this hotel. A fleet of adorable gentleman Pokemon butlers was exactly what would set Hotel Z apart! The more Serena thought about it, the more ideas she had for this place!

But before she could get to any of those finer details, she had a grand mysterious entrance to make.

“It’s been a while, AZ,” Serena said from where she was looming in the doorway, eyes cast downwards. Serena was taking much joy in making her entrance as unnecessarily dramatic as possible. “When I heard you were running a hotel, I didn’t believe it and had to come see for myself.” She slowly started to approach, then snapped her head up to meet AZ’s gaze.

AZ’s eyes widened in recognition. “Serena…?”

But Serena was nowhere near done with her bit. “Wow, you’ve really cleaned yourself up over the years. A vest and a bow tie? Really AZ? I’m shocked. You look way less homeless now. What else have I missed in 5 years? It’s comforting that Floette is still as trigger happy as ever though. At least she hasn’t changed.”

AZ smiled at her words, glad to see that Serena was just as theatrical as ever. “It’s good to see you again. You’ve grown up.”

“That is what happens when a normal human gets older. We’re not all immortal.” Serena rolled her eyes, then matched AZ’s smile. “But jokes aside, it’s good to see you and Floette again too. I’m really happy to see that the years have finally been kind to you. 3,000 years is too much pain for anyone, even you. You deserve this.”

“Thank you.” AZ’s heart warmed. “Life has been treating me well, and I hope the same for you.”

Urbain blinked. “Oh, you and AZ know each other?”

And how. Just wait for the sap to fade and the trolling to kick in.
Ah, that’s why she came to Lumiose after seeing his video! Not only did his ad work, but it also reunited two friends! Urbain really was excellent at making videos.

AZ nodded. “Yes, I owe Serena a great debt after everything she did for me five years ago.” Not only had Serena reunited him with Floette, but she had done everything in her power to help him get back on his feet afterwards, even if he refused most of her help. They had spoken at length together about his past, his sins, and his regrets. But that didn’t scare Serena off.

Instead, she sympathized with his struggle of having the weight of the world on his shoulders and not making perfect choices that came with awful consequences. Serena continued to spend time with him, true quality time. They joked together, laughed together, ate together, and cried together. It made AZ feel like a person again for the first time in many, many years.

AZ would forever be grateful to Serena for that.

“I’ve told you already, you don’t owe me anything,” Serena insisted. “Just let Lemis hang out with Floette, and we’re even.” Lemis would fit in the hotel’s secluded courtyard out front, which was perfect. It was cute watching a giant hulking bird of death be best friends with a dainty Floette. Those two could gab for hours over their ancient war stories.

‘Immortals,’ Serena rolled her eyes.

She named dwath birb after lental beans? On the flip side it is amusong to see the two bond though death birds more like doting grandpa and the flotels a young thing in comparison...

“Your stay here will be on the house,” AZ declared with a nod. Floette spending time with Yveltal was nowhere near enough now that he finally had some means to pay her back.

“No, it will not!” Serena stated, narrowing her eyes. “Urbain told me your hotel is struggling! I will be paying in full and tipping a LOT!” she emphasized.

Which fair. She should be loaded and considering adventures and celebrity status.

AZ shook his head mirthfully. “It’s a kind offer, but I refuse to accept money from you.”

Serena pulled her wallet out of her tote bag and dropped an exorbitantly huge sum of cash onto the counter. “I can more than afford to stay here, so I will be paying! I am a paying customer. Emphasis on paying!” Serena challenged.

AZ pushed the money back towards her. “You’re overpaying!” he countered.

Serena scoffed. “You’re going to take it, or I will sneak into the lobby at night and put it in the register myself!”

“It’s too much, and even if it wasn’t, I won’t take money from you,” AZ denied staunchly.

Serena smirked. “If it makes you feel any better, you can consider the money my charitable contribution to the preservation of Kalos’ esteemed history as a part of my league responsibilities, or a generous donation to the elderly, either works.” Serena looked at AZ innocently with wide eyes. “We can’t have our national relic dying on us or destitute again, can we?”

Snorts. Ultimate age burn ten out of ten. With brownie ppijts tagged on too.

AZ’s face hardened, becoming stormy and serious. Serena looked just as vicious and intense as AZ.

Urbain’s eyes widened. He’d never seen AZ look like that before! ‘Oh shit, she pissed off AZ!! …Though, she’s not wrong, we do need the money.’

But to Urbain’s utter surprise, they both erupted in laughter.

AZ brightened. “It is good to see you again.”

“Yeah, it is good to see you too, gramps.” Serena smiled genuinely, voice light.

Serena truly had missed him.

“Speaking of, we have to get you a website for this hotel. I know you’re very out of touch,” Serena lamented sarcastically while checking her nails, “but I’ll painstakingly teach you how to use a Rotom Phone to manage reservations. Before you go off again with, “back in my day,” gramps, back in your day you had sticks and rocks for tools. The stone age is over. It’s time to adapt.”

AZ sighed. “Serena, I–”

Thats an ambitious plan for Ser' as someone who has worked tech support i wish her all the luck .

“And I’m still not over the Holo Caster thing,” Serena cut him off. “I know five years must not feel like anything to you, but it was a long time for me. Make it up to me by doing this.”

“I’m truly sorry, Serena,” AZ apologized sincerely, forlorn. “Five years isn’t nothing.”

“You’re more than forgiven as long as you don’t let it happen again,” Serena relented. The lack of contact had really hurt her. Serena had needed his support, she had come to rely on it after everything five years ago, and it was a struggle to be suddenly stripped of that when she needed it most.

“Alright,” AZ acquiesced with a long tired sigh, “I’ll give the Rotom Phone a try.”

“Great!” Serena bounced back cheerfully.

Urbain chuckled at the exchange. He didn’t realize AZ had friends, let alone close friends! “You guys must be really close, huh? So how did you meet each other before Hotel Z?” Urbain had to know the story behind how such a pretty stylish girl ended up being best friends with the hulking grandpa that was AZ.

“Wow, you really don’t recognize me even after knowing my name,” Serena deadpanned. “Our meeting was broadcast on live television.” Serena took off the glasses she was wearing. “How about now?”

With the glasses removed, it finally clicked who she was, and Urbain blurted out, “Arceus, you’re Serena! You’re the Champion!” Urbain very much knew who she was! He watched all of the videos of her matches! Her battles were wild and her strategies awe-inspiring. She was someone every trainer in the region studied and looked up to!

Wait, that meant the Sylveon that did horrible things to that Cleffa was THAT Sylveon!! He winced. Yikes, no wonder that happened. It was like trying to delicately knock a pebble off a table with a shotgun.

“Yes, that’s me,” Serena confirmed airily as she admired the glasses in her hands. “Wow, these fake glasses really are killer.”

‘Well, now I gotta try even harder to convince her to stay! She’s exactly the kind of member Team MZ is looking for! With the Champion on our side, we can protect Lumiose no problem!’ Urbain resolved. ‘She’s not at all what I imagined THE Serena to be like. I like the real Serena a lot more!’

AZ chuckled, enjoying Urbain’s shock. AZ hadn’t realized Urbain didn’t know Serena’s title, but was glad he got to witness the rug being pulled out from under him. Serena’s travel bag caught his eye. More precisely, the Zygarde cell crawling out of her travel bag. It was an omen to ponder over later.

“I was concerned when a bag arrived with no owner,” AZ explained now that Serena’s bag was on his mind. “That is why I sent Floette out to seek you. It seems my worries were unfounded, after all, you had Serena by your side.”

“No, I’m glad you did! Floette saved our skins with her Light of Ruin – it’s a heck of a move,” Urbain applauded. “You’re so wise, AZ, I can almost believe you really ARE three thousand years old like you always say!” he snickered.

Serena giggled, loving the fact that apparently no one believed AZ’s age was real, but cut herself off with an unwilling yawn. She was dead tired. Far, far too much had happened today. She needed her beauty sleep!

Noticing this, AZ nodded at her. “Serena, before you retire, pray, allow me a few words. I hope you’ll indulge me as your host.” AZ straightened, standing up a little taller. “Treasure your companions, and never betray that faith. That is all I wish to say.”

“I understand, AZ,” Serena acknowledged sincerely. AZ had made countless mistakes in his past, regrets he would carry with him forever, and this sage advice was the culmination of his entire life. Those were the words AZ now lived by, his lesson finally learned that day at her Champion parade.

Serena was never going to be one to betray her Pokemon, but she understood that he was speaking about more than just her Pokemon. He was speaking as a ruler, a king, advising her on how she should be handling her Champion title. To AZ, a man who had lived 3,000 years and was a king of Kalos in his own right, “companions” meant “the people of Kalos” and “the people you share this life with.”

His words also served as a subtle criticism of her lack of action. It stung, but he was right.

Serena knew AZ saw what she saw was afoot in Lumiose. AZ had been right beside her five years ago, after all, and was privy to all of the details. He was one of the few that saw the same side of Lysandre that she did.

“Good.” AZ nodded, satisfied, hunching back over his cane once more. “Room 202 is yours to use.” He handed her the key to the room.

“You can take the elevator to the second floor,” Urbain provided helpfully. “Rest up for tonight, then come meet me down here in the lobby tomorrow morning!”

“Alright. Thank you for your help today, Urbain. It was very kind of you. I’m excited to get to know you better during my stay.” Serena smiled brightly.

“Nah, it was nothing! I’m happy to help!” Urbain blushed slightly and scratched the back of his head, looking away. “And I can’t wait to get to know you too.”

“Well then, goodnight to both of you.” Serena grabbed her bag, and headed into the elevator with a wave.

Once the elevator doors closed, Floette hovered over to Urbain, who was still staring at the elevator, and slyly nudged him with her flower

“What?” Urbain blinked, then looked at Floette’s knowing look. “No, it’s not like that!” he insisted. Floette tittered mirthfully, not at all believing him. “Okay, maybe a little like that. But just a little!” he conceded.

AZ chortled. “Serena is a wonderful young lady,” he commented approvingly.

Urbain groaned, hiding his face in his hands. “Not you too, AZ.”

A wonderful introduction to ZA as well as a nice snapshot onto the upcoming excitment of the cast pinking off of each other. To be candid i'm surprised she was able to keep her o.p. team and wonder how the difficulty will rise to meet her situation as time goes on..

Thanks for sharing this fic and welcome to the boards.

Z • ──── ✿৻(๑'ᵕ'๑) ──── • A​



*Knock, knock*

“Hey. Sorry, I know I said you should sleep, but can we talk for a sec?” Urbain’s muffled voice came from the other side of her door.

Serena was so thankful she hadn’t changed or gotten ready for bed yet. She scrambled to open the door.

Urbain bowed to her once more. “Begging your pardon, dear guest! I neglected to show you our hotel’s true gem – a stunning panorama.” He rose from the bow and winked. “That means, “C’mon, you gotta see the roof!””

Serena curtsied back. “Why of course, good sir, I’d be delighted.” She linked their arms together, and grinned up at him. “You may escort me.” Serena reveled in the fact that it was Urbain this time who was startled and struggled to make eye contact until they parted once they reached the roof. Ha!

“Bit late now, but welcome back to Lumiose City!” Urbain walked to the railing and looked out over the twinkling lights. “It’s got its weird parts, but it’s a good place. I like it here.”

Serena joined him at the railing. “A very apt assessment, I agree.”

Urbain’s face turned uncharacteristically serious. “Listen… I owe AZ big-time for all the help he’s given me since I got here. I want to do right by him in return. Not to put you on the spot, but since you seem really close to AZ… think you could give me a hand?”

Serena understood that look well, the unspoken weight of one’s past. “I’d be happy to.” She was never one who could ignore an earnest plight. Despite everything, Serena still had a bleeding heart. Besides, AZ was her dear friend, she’d always be there to help him.

“You’re the best!” Urbain grinned, sticking his fist out. Serena returned the fist bump.

Even with the chaos and re-emerging trauma the day had brought, Serena was glad to be back in Lumiose. Her return brought back the companionship she’d gone years without. AZ really did know what he was talking about, huh? That wise old man.

As she gazed out at Prism Tower, Serena made a solemn vow to herself that she would never allow anything like Lysandre to ever happen to this city and her region again. Her extended sabbatical in Hoenn was over. Serena had been running for too long. It was time to take a stand and show Kalos that she was here to protect its future.

It was time to be a true Champion.

The one Serena had desperately wished Diantha was, and failed to be, for Kalos five years ago.




End Notes

Nickname central:
Sensei (Greninja) – because he acts like a know-it-all wise old man and tries to teach the other party members things like he knows better. He does not know better.
Gattaca (Sylveon) – named after the nucleobases of DNA (G, A, T, C) and the excellent sci-fi movie about genetic bio-engineering, GATTACA.
Lemis (Yveltal) – named after the shortened slang of Les Miserables, Le Mis. The book title translates to English literally as “The Miserable Ones,” but can also mean "the wretched," or "the outcasts." All of which fit Yveltal very well. Also because the whole book is about (among many other things) destruction, death, and revolution in Paris.
 

Slayerofthewind

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Thank you for the review!! Your comments and reactions were a genuine joy to read!!

So, I kind of jumped the gun and agreed to review this for blitz before I realized how absurdly large these chapters are... 12k is waaay higher than I would normally go for. But you know what? I stand by my words! REVIEW GO!!! :letsgorb:

For blitz, I only need to provide 250 words for a review, but I'm not going to do that to you. Screw the points! You are going to get a proper review from me! :okgon:

Hahaha!! I appreciate the dedication, especially since you're not familiar with the Z-A or XY games!

I like how you walk through this bit. As someone who has almost no clue what the crap is going on(I did look up some summaries for the games to get a basic understanding), this is all highly useful info!

So funny enough, everything you quoted here re this comment is all stuff I created for this fic specifically LOLOL. In cannon XY, AZ does interrupt your Champion parade and is a character in the game that Team Flare captures -- AZ is a 3,000 year old ancient king of Kalos who built the Ultimate Weapon. I do recommend reading a summary of the lore of AZ as it is super relevant to both the XY games and Z-A games. However, when lore does become relevant for him, I do absolutely bring it up and discuss in time with the fic.

I like how the narration can tell us stuff about multiple characters.

Perhaps I should experiment with such a style for me own fic? 🤔

It's called third-person omniscient point of view, and it is my personal favorite to write in!

Yeah but WHO is actually anti-pokemon in the pokemon world? :unquag: I don't think I ever see anyone like that in the games or anime. I do expect people like that might exist in fanfics though.

Actually more people than you would think! In several of the Pokemon games, especially if you talk to all NPCs, which I do, there's a lot more varied opinions than you'd expect. For example, there are several NPCs in Z-A that will just outright say they don't like Pokemon.

I guess the fact that you mentioned these two are paired implies romantic pairing? I certainly hope so, because these two seem to have personality types I enjoy watching romance between! :eyes:

Yep! The overall pairing is UrbainxSerena, it's in the initial overview section of the fic!

Oh, his battle happened off-screen I guess. I suppose he isn't important enough to watch. Serena is where it's at!

We actually don't see his battle here in the game either hahaha!!

ALSO, Pancham stealing your bag and having to battle this trainer is actually how you get your starter Pokemon in Z-A haha!!

Serena, you should have just had Urbain battle instead. I bet Totodile wouldn't have pile drived the poor little Cleffa into near-oblivion... :copyka:

You kind of can't have anyone else battle for you in the Z-A Royale battle zones haha! The whole concept is "anyone can challenge anyone" and thus, the waitress is challenging Serena, not Urbain.

And I am laughing yet again. Love this humor in this fic! :mewlulz:

AHH YAY!!! So happy you're enjoying the humor!!

Power levels here be crazy! And I like crazy. :veelove:

Cleffa? Forget Cleffa! She was about to ever-loving MURDER them!
What on earth? Urbain is just going to sweep the almost murder under the rug? Um, ok...!

Floette almost literally killing this group of trainers and Urbain stopping her then brushing off what happened is an actual cutscene from the game!!!! HAHAHAHAHA!! Floette just is veryyyy trigger happy. Hold on, let me grab you a clip of it. Ah, okay only could find this long video, so here’s the time stamps for the specific moment: 12:29 to 14:04.


Are you aware of just how short attention spans are these days? People may say "Oh chapters length is no big deal, you can make chapters however long you want" Yeah, no. Screw that. Way too long. 10k max. If you want to be average, shoot for 5k. If you want to be real good, shoot for under 5k. You will get WAY more readers if you find ways to split them up. There is no excuse for an 18k chapter. I think I might be the only one bold enough to call you out on this, but I imagine most people think it even if they don't say it...

I actually disagree with you on this point. Having long chapters is not a bad thing at all, it's just different from the cannon of fanfics that you might be used to. However, long chapters in the 15-20K and even beyond is common and normal on some other sites. For example, this fic is also cross posted on AO3 and has had no trouble racking up a significant reader base there and readers are genuinely excited by my chapter length. Word count is a rather arbitrary concept. A lot of people, myself included, prefer reading long chapters over short chapters. I've found that attention span isn't as much of a factor as you might think. It's essentially the same argument of "I don't watch movies because they're 2 hours long, I only watch TV shows." Long chapters is just a mode of writing and a preference thing. I feel that longer word counts let me explore characters with greater depth and dive into the narrative more significantly than in bite size chunks.

I more than understand it might not be for everyone. And totally fine if people read my fic, or even just a chapter of my fic, in more than one sitting, read at your own pace!! But I don't really want to or see the need to chop up chapters arbitrarily just to port them to this site -- not my thing. I'd rather write the way I like best that let's me achieve a stronger narrative. When I write chapters, I have an arc and a goal I'm achieving narratively, symbolically, subtext, character arc, thematically, etc per chapter. I generally take as much word count as I need to achieve that. Sometimes it's 8K sometimes it's 18K, I'll write it as long as I feel it needs to be to achieve what I'm trying to do. It's just a stylistic and narrative writing preference thing that I'm absolutely gonna stand by.

Totally fine though if you're not someone who likes long chapters! Seriously, no hard feelings at all!!!

Now for the gushing. Everything from the writing, characters, and events were fantasic. This fic made me laugh numerous times and each character is brimming with life and personality. This fic is darn impressive and I thouroghly enjoyed reading it. If it has other problems or errors, I doubt they will even approach harming the experience for the average reader. I don't think anyone expects a new user to post a fic of this quality. Well done!

THANK YOU!!! Also, I am SO HAPPY the humor is landing for you!! I really love that my writing was able to translate that well for you despite you not knowing the Z-A game well! Really amazing to hear! Especially because I actually think that this chapter 1 is the least interesting chapter of this fic LOL!! If you really love the characters, events, and humor this much in just chapter 1, you really should check out the rest of the fic!

This fic is just something I'm writing purely for fun in my free time, I'm not putting through as rigorous of a whole egg editing process as I usually would with stories and is not perfect at all haha! There's lots of bugs and such. While I might be a new user on this forum, I'm actually not a new writer by any means haha!

Perhaps if you are inclined you might review my fic? I'd love to hear from you, if so!

Absolutely!! I actually just wanted to respond to your comment before I read your fic! I'm reading it right after posting this, and I'm very excited :) You're going to get a full review from me too!!
 

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Thank you for the review!! Your comments and reactions were a genuine joy to read!!
Well, your writing made it easy.

Hahaha!! I appreciate the dedication, especially since you're not familiar with the Z-A or XY games!
I was shocked how little difference it seemed to make.

So funny enough, everything you quoted here re this comment is all stuff I created for this fic specifically LOLOL. In cannon XY, AZ does interrupt your Champion parade and is a character in the game that Team Flare captures -- AZ is a 3,000 year old ancient king of Kalos who built the Ultimate Weapon. I do recommend reading a summary of the lore of AZ as it is super relevant to both the XY games and Z-A games. However, when lore does become relevant for him, I do absolutely bring it up and discuss in time with the fic.
Yeah I read a summary of the lore a while back. I've got a basic understanding.

It's called third-person omniscient point of view, and it is my personal favorite to write in!
Well, I like how it works for you. I might try that style in a future book of mine.

Actually more people than you would think! In several of the Pokemon games, especially if you talk to all NPCs, which I do, there's a lot more varied opinions than you'd expect. For example, there are several NPCs in Z-A that will just outright say they don't like Pokemon.
Kudos to Nintendo for letting characters have that view.

Yep! The overall pairing is UrbainxSerena, it's in the initial overview section of the fic!
Ok yeah, I really like that.

We actually don't see his battle here in the game either hahaha!!
It's interesting how all the nitpicks I have seem to be canon things. I really can't fault you for including them in that case! Very interesting.

ALSO, Pancham stealing your bag and having to battle this trainer is actually how you get your starter Pokemon in Z-A haha!!
I had no idea how much canon you were using. I assume it will deviate more as things go on, but it's ok if it doesn't.

You kind of can't have anyone else battle for you in the Z-A Royale battle zones haha! The whole concept is "anyone can challenge anyone" and thus, the waitress is challenging Serena, not Urbain.
Ah another canon thing. Makes sense.

AHH YAY!!! So happy you're enjoying the humor!!
Yeah it was some great stuff! :mewlulz:

Floette almost literally killing this group of trainers and Urbain stopping her then brushing off what happened is an actual cutscene from the game!!!! HAHAHAHAHA!! Floette just is veryyyy trigger happy. Hold on, let me grab you a clip of it. Ah, okay only could find this long video, so here’s the time stamps for the specific moment: 12:29 to 14:04.
Yet another thing to blame on canon. Everyone who played ZA would already be aware of that too. That makes your fic even better than I realized it to be!

I actually disagree with you on this point. Having long chapters is not a bad thing at all, it's just different from the cannon of fanfics that you might be used to.
Ok I tried. For the record, I didn't expect you to agree. I probably wouldn't either in your shoes. Maybe more people will mention it later and you will reconsider. Though since you have received attention on AO3 too already, perhaps that is unlikely.

However, long chapters in the 15-20K and even beyond is common and normal on some other sites.
Normal doesn't make it better.

For example, this fic is also cross posted on AO3 and has had no trouble racking up a significant reader base there and readers are genuinely excited by my chapter length.
I'd say they are more excited by the fact that you are providing longer content in general for your fic. If you made it a one shot of 7k length, it would be disappointingly small.

It's popular because it's ZA which just came out. But people love it because of how well it's written and due to recommendations.

Word count is a rather arbitrary concept. A lot of people, myself included, prefer reading long chapters over short chapters.
When I'm just reading, I agree with you. Chapter length doesn't matter. It feels different when you are doing an in depth review in a style such as mine.

I've found that attention span isn't as much of a factor as you might think. It's essentially the same argument of "I don't watch movies because they're 2 hours long, I only watch TV shows."
I have no problem with attention span, (except for reviews for long chapters I guess?) but there are readers out there that do.

Long chapters is just a mode of writing and a preference thing. I feel that longer word counts let me explore characters with greater depth and dive into the narrative more significantly than in bite size chunks.
I agree with you. Length allows things to become more in some great ways. But fic length is not the same as chapter length.

I more than understand it might not be for everyone.
I guess when it's that popular, you get the luxury of not having to worry about it. It's different when you write something niche like me...

I didn't actually set out to make fanfiction. It just kind of happened. What i wrote happened to not be from a very popular game in the fandom. It wasn't something I specifically chose. More like it chose me.

And totally fine if people read my fic, or even just a chapter of my fic, in more than one sitting, read at your own pace!!
Good advice.

But I don't really want to or see the need to chop up chapters arbitrarily just to port them to this site -- not my thing.
You don't need to do that from a function standpoint. There aren't even really any unofficial rules for it. I guess at the end of the day, my advice just isn't needed for a fic like yours. Popularity talks regardless of its origin.

My fic is at a disadvantage in that regard, but the uniqueness of what I write allows the bar to be set pretty low, so at least I don't have direct competition. I still try my best to make it as good as I can though.

I'd rather write the way I like best that let's me achieve a stronger narrative. When I write chapters, I have an arc and a goal I'm achieving narratively, symbolically, subtext, character arc, thematically, etc per chapter. I generally take as much word count as I need to achieve that.
I agree the narrative is the most important thing at its core. The reality is that you don't need to consider reviewer experience as much because the popularity of the source material outweighs it. It's a far different situation than what I am used to.

Sometimes it's 8K sometimes it's 18K, I'll write it as long as I feel it needs to be to achieve what I'm trying to do. It's just a stylistic and narrative writing preference thing that I'm absolutely gonna stand by.
Well, I'm happy for you that you are in a situation where you can take that stance with no worries.

Totally fine though if you're not someone who likes long chapters! Seriously, no hard feelings at all!!!
I don't mind long chapters for reading, but they are hard for me to get through when reviewing. I like the feeling of accomplishment when I complete a review and I don't get as many of those with long chapters.

THANK YOU!!! Also, I am SO HAPPY the humor is landing for you!!
One of the things I love most about fanfiction is the ability to have interactions like this with authors. If your were Hollywood-level fame, you would never reply to a review from me because you wouldn't have time. I'm glad my review has brightened your day!

I really love that my writing was able to translate that well for you despite you not knowing the Z-A game well! Really amazing to hear! Especially because I actually think that this chapter 1 is the least interesting chapter of this fic LOL!!
Hmmm.... You are tempting me to come back for your absurdly long chapter 2 for another review. I'm going to keep calling it that too, but it's a friendly jab at this point.

If you really love the characters, events, and humor this much in just chapter 1, you really should check out the rest of the fic!
Hmmm... I'll decide that after I see your review for my fic. (I came here for you first.)

This fic is just something I'm writing purely for fun in my free time, I'm not putting through as rigorous of a whole egg editing process as I usually would with stories and is not perfect at all haha!
Well, however you do it, the fic is high quality regardless.

There's lots of bugs and such. While I might be a new user on this forum, I'm actually not a new writer by any means haha!
It definitely shows.

Absolutely!! I actually just wanted to respond to your comment before I read your fic! I'm reading it right after posting this, and I'm very excited :) You're going to get a full review from me too!!
Hopefully you go easier on me than I did on you. I'm a new writer and that fic is my first ever for any fandom. I'm going to go check it out. But thank you very much for your reply to my review. I enjoy hearing back from authors almost as much as I enjoy reviews for my own fic!
 

Slayerofthewind

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Thank you SO MUCH for taking the time to check out my fic, Flyg0n! I know I jumped the gun and reviewed your fic before I could actually respond to your review, buuuuuut I got hooked on your fic and enjoyed your writing that much!

Don't mind me, I will be making some playful jabs at characters and sarcasm as well as commentary.

Oh, please do! I enjoy humor very very much. Please feel free to make fun of literally anything and everything I write LOL!

Thats because you suck at making videos Urbain sweetie :mewlulz:
Urbain is utterly terrible at making videos, and I find that so sooooo funny!! Especially because he has the most confidence in his abilities in making them.

every time I read this line it kills me, its so funny. I never even thought of what the XY protags might think but this would be SO funny if they saw it.
Aside from the gripes I had with Z-A and wanting to fix them that I mention in my end notes, this is essentially one of the main ideas that sparked this fic in the first place. "Okay, so, where the hell is the XY character?? They're essentially confirmed to be the Champion in Z-A, but are not doing anything about Lumiose? Because after hearing tons of NPC dialogue, the Kalos league is reallllllly struggling, so I'm guessing they're absent for some reason. Wouldn't it be funny if they just actually don't know about everything up in Kalos, and the way they learn was from Urbain's dumb videos!?!?"

Urbain is kind of adorable tho
SEE!! It's happening!! Literally 3 line notes before this you said in response to Serena saying Urbain was "very cute": "Doubtful but sure lets go with that :mewlulz:. But I can see that Serena might think this until he opens his mouth."

My take on Urbain is that he is an idiot who is accidentally effortlessly charming. Like his aura/charisma is carrying him and makes the things he says seem less cringy and more suave... but only 2/5 times. The other 3/5 times he's a train wreck. Oh boy does Urbain's foot-in-mouth syndrome start showing up immediately in chapter 2 hahahahaha!!

No, of course he doesn't, he wouldn't know a good vine if it hit him in the face.
Urbain is the kind of guy who would unironically use the pipesfalling.mp4 sound effect over a video of him doing a dance with a star wipe transition and that's the whole video. #hotelz

Wait until you meet the death Fletchinder on the one obelisk and the worlds most annoying Froakie sentry on the other. Also when they start overruning the plaza's with holo-zones and pushing out the people.
Serena's journey to eventually having a mental break down because of the batshit insane wild zone choices is one of my favorite bits LMAO!! Serena might be strong, but I am determined to make literally every other thing in Lumiose be a problem for her hehehehehe!!

Nooo Serena. It's not all your fault. Poor thing, I feel bad for her. But also YESSSSS juicy trauma, I'm here for it. I think this is actually really fun and an interesting angle to take the story bc the XY protag is very justified in feeling upset by the events of the games.
Literally my same thoughts!! Oh we go deep into her trauma over the course of this fic and it's origin. The XY games' story ends are particularly reallllllly bad from the POV of the player character, especially Pokemon Y, which I am specifically making Serena the protag of because I want juicier trauma!!!

:mewlulz: cackling. Urbain is suitably and exactly as dense as I always pictured.
YESSS!!!!!! I know this forum's tags don't work the same as AO3, but I still put all of the tags as a paragraph in the overview for this fic, but here are my tags for Urbain I made up and am very proud of:

  • one of the 10 views Urbain’s video got was Serena
  • when you’re terrible at marketing but also excellent because your video found the most famous person in the region
  • Urbain is a Precious Gullible Idiot
  • Urbain is Effortlessly Charming
  • Urbain’s 100000 Blood Money Video

This battle is gold, I love it. I really enjoy comedic stuff with OP characters and this was great.
"Comedic stuff with OP characters" + ✨trauma and angst✨ is essentially the summary of this entire fic

Oh Yesssssss!!! Because when I was prepping for writing this fic and saw that the waitress sent out a Cleffa of all things, I immediately was like, "Oh my god, that's the worst Pokemon you could ever send out against the most OP person in the region... let me make it worse!!! Hehehe!!"

Serena: *is OP*
Author: Ok, but I'm gonna make you struggle in battles still because I find joy in making problems for you.
Serena: Like you could ever do that--
*The cutest 1 hour old precious Cleffa bean appears*
Serena: OH NO!! MORAL ISSUES WITH BEING OP!!

<3 awww yeeee thank you Serena. I'm glad someone is kind to him and understands him. 3000 years is a long as frick time, he suffered enough.
The concept of just how long 3,000 years really is for a person is going to be a big thing in this fic. People often don't really realize just how cursed of an existence 3,000 years alone wandering is -- it's hell. AZ has more than payed for his crimes, 3,000 years eclipses any prison sentence. CUE THE ANGST!! WOOOOO!!!

No, no he is not :mewlulz:
No, he's terrible at it, but it's funnier to give him more confidence and enable him to become even more of a disaster~!!! :veelove:

oh my gosh she has the freakin Yveltal from XY too??? She's stacked. Can't wait for Urbain's reaction to that.
Knock knock, chapter 3 would like to say a few words. Because of course I had to write that scene!!

FINALLY. Man boy got one braincell bouncing around and it just hit the corner of his brain like a DVD logo just now.
I LOVE that comparison because it also implies that Urbain's braincell only hits the corner every once in a blue moon, but we all watch on the edge of our seats, fully enraptured, for that moment that it does hit. And when it does hit, oh we cheer like it's the greatest accomplishment ever! Good for you, Urbain!!!!! We are literally stunned you did the bare minimum, but we love you and will cheer you on like you just won the Super Bowl.

Huge freakin mood hah. I loved this game so much despite glaring problems I had with the narrative but wooww did the executions and ways some stuff played out feel rough as ever.
Yepppppp!! I love the game so SO much, but it was not the strongest narrative execution. What they were trying to do was good, but they didn't quite hit that mark. But like you had ALL the building blocks to be something objectivley great and yet you somehow fumbled that. My main gripe is just the sheer missed potential. So in this fic, I'm endeavoring to mix it up, elevate the narrative, and fix those issues to make the plot plot more.

It really does and this is a fantastic fic idea.
Also please know all my jokes and snide remarks are in good fun as well, not bashing Urbain or ZA, kek.
Love that you love the concept of this fic!!

And ofc, don't worry, I totally am there with you on the Urbain and Z-A jokes thing. I make fun of Urbain a lot because it's funny, but I'm actually going to give him a hell of a character arc that he DESERVED in the game!! Urbain's arc was so fascinating because he's actually a really complex character, but the game skirted around the edges of taking the extra step to make his arc really really good... but I'm gonna take that step 😤. And then the end of his arc made NO SENSE in game, and I am forever pissed about this. If you couldn't tell by my approach to this fic and writing, I'm going to be making jokes about everything while still balancing the care for the narrative. I also just really enjoy making fun of just about everything, so I very much love your sarcasm and joke comments!!! Please keep making them lol.

I have to say, one chapter in an I am hooked. I think a first chapters job is to have enough of some intrigue to capture the reader to keep going and it definitely did that for me! The prose and narration are very flavorful and characterful. The wit and humor really landed for me, blending some dry sardonic attitudes, sarcasm and other quips without feeling too grating or clashing.
SO THRILLED to hear you say that!! I currently have 5 chapters of this fic written already, working on porting them all over to this forum, and I actually think that chapter 1 is the least interesting one so far. I kinda had to stay somewhat in the lines of the game's intro scene for this chapter while adding substantial of my own spice, but starting the next chapter, I start to break game sequence a LOT more, mix up game events as I please, and the "cannon divergence while also still somehow being the existing Z-A story" becomes more and more apparent with each chapter! Character development and exploration for all characters incomingggggg!!

I also found you did a wonderful job with Serena and Urbain and their dynamic. It's quite hard to sell me on crushes generally, but I think they had fun banter and chemistry with each other in a way thats more engaging than traditional giggling and blushing. I also really enjoy the bits between Serena and AZ and I'm quite looking forward to more of that! I think its really nice that AZ had a friend in Serena, even if he was being silly and stubborn and refused to accept her help.
I take a character arc first perspective to romance, and I think the UrbainxSerena pairing works because they are going to be additive to each other's character arcs -- this will become more clear what I mean specifically in terms of their arcs as the fic continues. Interactions have to have chemistry for me to even consider a pairing. Blushing and giggling has its time and place, but like, and I'm so sorry, that's so boringggggg. Give me drama!! Give me pining! Give me really horrible attempts at flirting! Give me just moreee than just that and tons of character interactions!!

The AZ - Serena dynamic is one that we're gonna go deep into as well! Much more AZ and Serena stuff to come~!

Also the glimpses of Serena's trauma are juicy and I can't wait for more. Love me some stuff showing that the protags of previous games are and absolutely would be traumatized by that.... which reminds me??? Oh my GOSH how will she react when she learns that Lysandre- er, I mean L is alive?? That's gonna rock her world. oh dear. Also look lets all be honest, L is a completely different character from Lysandre in my head :P.
Yesssssssssss to all of this! Oh my god, L!! I actually already have the whole meeting scene written, I couldn't help myself, and it is everything. Lysandre is a fascinating character, and I cannot wait to start writing him!! ...And Serena's interactions with him omfg.

Anyways so far things are mostly by the beat for the games, but much more entertaining thanks to Serena being OP, so I imagine there won't be a ton of battles at first. Which if so, would be kinda nice, not everything needs to be a power struggle.
Beat by beat for the games is about to derailllllllll massively while still being around the same beats for the game -- I want to "elevate" and "reimagine" the story by changing things up and beefing it up. It's going to feel a LOT more fresh very soon. Couldn't really escape game arrival intro too much.

Battles actually are going to come, and I love writing them!! Like I mentioned before, my goal is to cause just the most problems~!! I enjoy OP characters and the rule of cool a lot, but I also need those characters to be put in just the worst circumstances and make them struggle so the "rule of cool" moments feel so much more satisfying to read. What makes Serena OP isn't really her team, it's her competence, and that's going to make things veryyyyy interesting... especially because if you read the summary, a ✨brand new team✨ is on the horizon for her. Battles are going to be a thing soon. Keep in mind I dub this "the most chaotic attempt at revising the PLZA plot." This fic is going to live up to that name hehehehehe!!

Genuinely would LOVE to see you continue to read and react to this fic because I feel like we are very much on the same page when it comes to Z-A and the love for trauma/drama/humor!! If you're hooked after just chapter 1, you're really going to love the rest of what this fic has in store! I'm gonna upload chapter 3 tonight :)
 

Slayerofthewind

Chaos Gremlin
Pronouns
she/her
THANK YOU so much for taking the time to check out my fic!

I'm wonder how Looker, or any of the adults in power tied up with Lysander's maddness would be respondong to this insanity. Poor professor sycamore at this point.
"How would everyone from XY react to the events of Z-A" is one of the main reasons I wanted to write this fic in the first place. I'm gonna bring back in a lot of XY characters that absolutely should've been in Z-A.

...Yes, poor Professor Sycamore who's totally still in Kalos and didn't jump ship immediately :mewlulz:

But Serenas got opinions galore and doesnt seem inclined to drop it.
That's Serena's character in a nutshell haha! And doesn't drop it to her own detriment sometimes.

Oh its going to be an over the top nightmare piece... wait until she bumps into
Amnesiac Lysandre
she's going to lose her everloving mind.
I couldn't help myself, I already have that scene written, and it's everything.

Urb' has.. no clue what he's doing.. granted he's 13 so he gets a pass... but still.
Ah, you might have missed this in the overview section of the fic, but Serena and Urbain are both 18. However, Urbain still has no clue what he's doing.

I'm getting a "someone paid dlc and got the looker look" vive of of this one... it reminds me of looker a bit... the hat give Carmen Sandeigo vibes.. or perhaps Zib vibes... its an interesting look for someone failing at blending in 101...
Serena is terrible at being inconspicuous, but she thinks she's awesome at it. This is going to keep being a thing lol. And I'll say that you're spot on with the Looker vibes haha! The reason for that is going to be more apparent in subsequent chapters.

No don't Ser'. You wont stay under cover long if you swan into an internet videoathon. You might as well wear a sign that says "champion is here".
Hahahah... pffff, no... that would never happen... that would be such a bad move!

...Unless.

Though it does raise the question. If she fights to get it reversed, what happens to all these new pokemon and thier habitats?
Serena's journey to attempt to fix everything in Lumiose while being increasingly pissed off at every new thing she learns because why does no one care about these things? Serena isn't gonna react great to most things going on in Lumiose, and the living conditions of the Pokemon in the wild zones is going to be a big one.

This CEO is gibing off lysandre vibes. Too intent, earth shaming goal (granted in one local and more historical based but still damaging to the base frame work of a society/town ect) and a love of modern tech.

Forget meeting SPOILER Serena's going to take damage from seeing those adds too often.
YUP!!! The fact that Z-A literally OPENS with this cut scene from Jett and NO ONE tries to draw the Lysandre vibes parallel?? 'Cmon guys, Z-A was meant for XY people to react to all of this.

I mean trauma is a legit reason to nope out of responsibility while one heals. Its just a shame that Ser' hasn't licked this yet as i suspect its going to get uglier as it goes.
I completely agree, but Serena is very much not over what happened despite what she might insist and is still carrying a lot of misplaced guilt. Things are going to get better and get worse all the time, lots of up and downs. But this new journey is meant to be the true healing arc for her.

I think Serena's being too optimistic here. Charming? I'd vote first to recieve a darwin award.
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!

Seriously Gat' is the poster child for the "murder is okay" meme.
Yes, yes she is.

She named dwath birb after lental beans?
Ah, no lol. He's named after Les Miserables. From my end notes:

Lemis (Yveltal) – named after the shortened slang of Les Miserables, Le Mis. The book title translates to English literally as “The Miserable Ones,” but can also mean "the wretched," or "the outcasts." All of which fit Yveltal very well. Also because the whole book is about (among many other things) destruction, death, and revolution in Paris.

Thats an ambitious plan for Ser' as someone who has worked tech support i wish her all the luck .
Oh, you're very much on the right track. Teaching AZ how to use a phone is going to be the worst for her.

A wonderful introduction to ZA as well as a nice snapshot onto the upcoming excitment of the cast pinking off of each other. To be candid i'm surprised she was able to keep her o.p. team and wonder how the difficulty will rise to meet her situation as time goes on..

Thanks for sharing this fic and welcome to the boards.
Thank you!!! I'm glad you enjoyed chapter 1! I'll also say that chapter 1, at least in my view, is actually the least interesting of the chapters of this fic because I couldn't really deviate from cannon as much as I wanted and mix things up to elevate the Z-A plot. That's going to change a lot starting in the next chapter.

Serena is going to be building a new team, I mentioned that in the summary. New team building begins in the next chapter, and there's a narrative reason to do it. The way I saw it, there was no way Serena would ever just accept one of the starter Pokemon from Urbain, especially when she had her own team on hand. There's a new take for a new team that I feel makes a lot of sense for her character and the narrative. The power scaling is really not going to be as "WOW you one shot everything!!" as you might think. In fact, my main goal at all times is to cause just the most problems for my characters lol. Difficulty is always going to be on Master Level, but Serena is very competent, and that's going to help a lot. If you decide to keep reading, you'll see what I mean with how I'm going to do this narratively and make it work!

Thank you again for the review and taking the time to read my fic! I appreciate the warm welcome!!
 

Nekodatta

Pokémon Trainer
Pronouns
She/Her
Partners
  1. koraidon-apex
  2. miraidon-ultimate
  3. skitty
  4. dodrio
Hello, this fic caught my eye because of its premise so I decided to check it out for this first week!
AZ, the 3,000-year-old giant homeless senile war criminal who interrupted her Champion parade, owned a HOTEL?!
Lmao that was pretty much the fandom's reaction when he was first shown

He’d always wished it would happen though. It would be proof that his PR ads were working
Poor Urbain is about to get his dream crushed, considering Serena only watched the video for a completely different reason lol

Te, pig.” Tepig muttered, overwhelmed. They were finally reaching the heights of fame they knew they were destined for! All of their secret midnight practices the three of them had while Urbain was sleeping were worth it!
Aww, making the three starter Pokémon get so into it was cute!!

and she was completely okay with endorsing AZ’s hotel de war crimes.
I love Serena's sass. She's never letting him live that one down ... Understandably, I would say.

The mental image of the towering AZ bumbling about with a flood of guests and struggling to do customer service was too good to pass up on. Serena would absolutely slap her face on whatever ad Hotel Z was putting out.
The pettiness lmao I love it.

Serena faltered, her disgust over design choices quickly fading into extreme suspicion of Quasartico.
Didn't we all suspect them? I have to say, compared to the.... Nothingburger we got, I almost would have preferred them to be evil. Or just.... Actually do something concrete lol. But I love that you make Serena ultra suspicious of them here because of using Holo technology and mentioning "beauty", even if it's completely coincidental, because, were they actually evil, it *would* totally be something that you would then look back on and say "they were totally foreshadowing it right in the opening cutscene!!!"

Arceus, you’re lucky you’re pretty. No!” she exclaimed, meeting his eyes. “What about that looked like it was planned?!”
For once I actually used the male character because I found Taunie cute, but Urbain actually works so much better here. He's got massive himbo energy ahah

That was some unconventional battle! I’ve never seen a Pokemon get knocked out from Mean Look before!” Urbain mocked, walking over casually from his own complete trouncing of a battle he’d dished out.
Yeah... Mean Look... Sure...

The little Cleffa came charging in at the Sylveon, armed with a confidence of a thousand burning suns, and about to execute the most epic Tackle of her life. “Cle–”

Gattaca, as instructed, used one of her ribbons to bat Cleffa away, sending it rocketing at high speeds before it slammed into the side of the nearby building with a loud resounding crack and a cloud of dust. Debris fell from the point of contact on the wall.
I love the description here, it's just hilarious and very pleasant to read. I've enjoyed your omniscient narrator in general actually, it took me a moment to get used to since I don't read it often but it's a lot of fun!
Also I live for descriptions of cute adorable Fairy types being absolute menaces, just like they should.

So, this first chapter was a nice setup to the story, we can already see some changes compared to canon thanks to the main character being Serena and not a random nobody. And they are important changes! The implications of the Champion taking part in the ZA Royale, her being immediately suspicious of Quasartico, actually having a connection with AZ and knowing about his past instead of being completely in the dark about it... It all immediately adds a lot of possible plot points that I can't wait to see explored.
There's really nothing I can say about the writing, it's clear that you have a lot of experience in writing already and I didn't spot any typos or anything else that stood out to me.

Talking about the characters, I'm enjoying Urbain's characterization and there's some nice chemistry with Serena.

One thing I liked about Serena is that while she knows that she is quite a lot stronger than probably everyone else, she didn't look down on Urbain but actually looked forward to doing a double battle with him, it's nice that she doesn't think of him as a noob but instead someone she can still have fun battling with.

I'm very curious how you are going to handle her strength across this story (and stuff like apparently having Yveltal with her just chilling), because having an OP main character can lead to some interesting dilemmas. After no one can challenge you anymore, what do you do from there?
So I'm really interested to see how you are going to handle some of the other participants in the Z-A Royale. I will definitely be coming back to this fic during the Blitz!
 

Tango

Mascot of the Doduo Alliance
Location
beyond the Nexus
Pronouns
He/him
Partners
  1. doduo
Said the Spider to the Fly

Chapter 2
My goodness.

Here I am staring down the 18k beast and the one immediately behind it as well. I've maximized my screen on my desktop monitor instead of making it take up half to make the chapter look shorter. I need all the help I can get. Like the Doduo from my fic, I seem to be a bit of a masochist... What other explanation could there be? Well, besides the quality of your writing and enjoyable characters anyway...

Chapter 2 review goooo.... (Arceus help me :copyka:)

Chapter summary:

“Will you walk into my parlour?” said the Spider to the Fly,
"'Tis the prettiest little parlour that ever you did spy;
The way into my parlour is up a winding stair,
And I have many curious things to shew when you are there."
"Oh no, no," said the little Fly, "to ask me is in vain,
For who goes up your winding stair can ne'er come down again."

-OR-

By asking her to join the Z-A Royale, Quasartico had given her the keys to the kingdom and was inviting Serena to wreck their entire lives with open arms. And she’d do it with a smile on her face and a pep in her step.
...the crap did I just read?? :unquag:

Ok, so Serena is going to kick some tail. I look forward to the spectacle!



Serena woke up in a delightfully vindictive mood that inspired a very good idea of how to kick off her plan to decimate Quasartico and everything they stood for.
Please please PLEASE let us watch her crush some opponents! I wanna see her wreck some stuff!

If evil needed their ass kicked, it was time to break out the miniskirt and thigh highs again.
Well, dang! Some sexy heroics going on here! 😳

She would become a specter of the past and remind everyone who had been mollified by her extended absence just who they were dealing with.
Love the confidence. :quag:

Not that the general public knew what she wore during her original journey, but for those who did know and remembered her, people who now had positions of power, the symbolism would ring abundantly clear. And those people were the exact ones she needed to put the fear of Arceus in and show that Serena was not messing around.

This wasn’t Serena the model and superstar showing up for a visit.

No.

It was Serena the Hero of Kalos, defeater of Team Flare, and Champion at their door step, striking fear in the hearts of the damned with her miniskirt. For those who knew, her haunting visage would be an undeniable echo of her past victories.
As a guy, I can't help but appreciate the miniskirt! :mewlulz:

Serena was back in every sense of the word, and this was her battle armor.

Serena cackled as she dressed, pulling on her black collared blouse, high waisted red miniskirt, and black thigh high socks, her dramatic little heart singing. She wrapped the very bottom of her hair in a hair tie. She pulled a chunk on either side free from the pony tail and let it join her longer bangs framing her face. Iconography was truly a wonderful thing.

Serena thrived on melodramatic mischief veiled by a coat of glamor and manners. She loved being a menace, but with nuanced subtlety and plausible deniability. Clever theatricality was truly a lost art.

Serena laced up her black high tops and donned her pink felt hat, placing white sunglasses on top of it. With a final hair fluff in the mirror, she grabbed her pink tote bag and headed out the door.
The dressing scene felt so dynamic and active! :eyes: I imagined it as a dramatic anime dressing montage as I read it.

The graphics and lack of voice acting in the game is appalling. Your fic is more vivid than the game, for sure!

Z • ──── ☆⌒(ゝ。∂) ✨ ──── • A​
Another stylized line break. These are pretty cool and this one conveys the glam, snark, and confidence Serena is feeling.

The lobby existed in muted harmony, nothing stood out too much on its own. The mismatched chairs with scattered patterned pillows didn’t clash, it was wholly charming. The organized chaos aesthetic at its finest. Something both uniquely AZ and undeniably old-Lumiose. Serena loved it.
So, you don't really paint a picture for me what this looks like, but you give it a vibe which I can fill in with my imagination. Probably a good way of handling descriptions since it keeps things simple without overly bloating them.

Urbain sat in a blue chair at the low coffee table with Floette by his side. “Hey! Good morning,” Urbain greeted Serena with a wave like it wasn’t 4:00 in the afternoon. No, he did not sit here waiting for her to wake up all day.
Being infatuated will certainly have that effect! :unquag:

“Good morning,” Serena said with a laugh. She very much knew exactly what time it was.
I love how she plays along with things. Such a fun personality! :veelove:

Serena reached into her bag and pulled out a paper box. “These PokePuffs are for your three Pokemon. I promised them a reward. Please thank them again for everything they did last night.”

“For sure! They’re gonna love it,” Urbain cheered. “Rough day yesterday, huh? Travel, jet lag, your bag gets stolen, then you get dragged into the Z-A Royale…” He shook his head, drawing Serena’s attention to his hair. Urbain’s hair was like strawberry lemonade. She had no idea how his dye job looked so good and perfectly complemented his skin tone.
He seems to be catching her eye a bit! :eyes: Next thing you know there will be a scene break and Serena will have him pinned to a wall as she makes out with him! :mewlulz:

“I’m glad you rested enough! You look much more refreshed now than you did when we met.” He stumbled to add, “Not that you didn’t look great then too!”
I love how the fic doesn't even try to hide his attraction to her. It just goes full steam ahead with it! :mewlulz:

Serena laughed again. “Yes, I feel much better now! The bed was very comfortable.” It really wouldn’t be hard for Serena to get the hotel customers after she put in a little work. “The Z-A Royale… That’s the whole mess with the battle zone, right?” Serena questioned.

“The Z-A Royale's a big Pokemon battle tournament headed by Quasartico that’s taking Lumiose by storm! I’m competing in it too, actually! Practically flying up the ranks.” Urbain scratched his cheek and looked very smug.

“I don’t doubt that,” Serena agreed. “From last night, I got the impression that you’d be quite the interesting trainer. Why did you decide to join this tournament and not the Gym circuit?"
Wait what? But he had a team of unevolved mon! Serena must be patronizing him... but he's too infatuated to take it as anything other than a compliment! :unquag:

Urbain want's to be patronized by her though. Serena can tell. She is just playing along with that too and he eats up every minute of it! I'm enjoying the dynamic.

Urbain blushed slightly from her acknowledgement. “I’m trying to become the strongest Trainer around so I can help protect Lumiose.
You've got a loooong way to go, Urbain. :mewlulz:

This is actually what I wanted your help with. Remember? Our talk last night on the roof? I know this is sudden, but can you join the Z-A Royale too, Serena?”

“Come again?” Serena asked, baffled. How did joining a tournament have anything to do with helping AZ?

Serena’s Rotom Phone buzzed and popped out of her pocket.

*You’ve received a message!*

Dear Serena,​
You are invited to join the Z-A Royale, a battle tournament to determine the greatest Pokemon Trainers in Lumiose City. Anyone who attains the highest rank, Rank A, will earn the right to call themselves one of Lumiose’s strongest Trainers and be granted a wish, as long as it is in our power to fulfill. If you wish to take part, please open the attached file to install the Z-A Royale app on your device. We eagerly await your enrollment.​
Sincerely,​
The Z-A Royale staff​

Serena’s heart skipped a beat. How did they get this number?! This was NOT a public number! This was her personal phone. Not the line set up through the league that went through several assistants and administrators before potentially forwarding something to Serena.

“I bet that was an invite to the Z-A Royale, right? Perfect timing!” Urbain tucked his hands behind his head. “I figured they’d invite you, since you held your own when you weren’t even signed up. And obviously because you’re the Champion and all.”
Urrrrbain... Did you DO something? 😏 Are you being sneaky?

How do they KNOW that Serena was in a battle zone last night?!

‘The holo-tech.’ Serena’s veins turned to ice. ‘It’s not just barriers, they were watching.’ Serena wanted to go back upstairs and scream into her pillow about how incredibly slimy and unethical this all was. It made her feel like shit just thinking about it.
Wow, but she was wearing a disguise but they were STILL able to tell? That still doesn't explain how they got her number though!

Serena might want to curb stomp evil under her dainty little foot, but she wasn’t a monster. She had empathy, sometimes more empathy than she should for people. Especially after Lysandre, who refused to look further than his own feet to see the consequences and effect his actions had on other people.

Which is why Serena had held out a smidgen of hope that she’d been wrong somehow, but that was shattered now, a pile of ash on the ground. They really had bought out Lysandre Labs, not just their patents, but the company as a whole along with all of their data records. There was no question about it now.

Holo-tech spyware to monitor people through their holo-tech, Holo Casters included, was something Lysandre had created and used, but never made public. Serena had been so relieved to hear it had been destroyed by Dexio and Sina long ago after defeating Lysandre in Team Flare’s HQ.

Looks like the “Masked Heroes” didn’t do a good enough job. Pathetic. Those two were always late to the party, but never failed to present their petty contributions as a huge triumph. Serena really shouldn’t have believed their words with full confidence. Sure, they might have destroyed the spy machine, but they didn’t ensure one could never be made again or delete the data.

Not only was Lysandre’s spyware machine back and in use, but was being used to monitor every nook and cranny of the city!

Quasartico wasn’t even denying it or trying to be secretive!! They were flaunting the use of spyware right in her face! The gall!

And the sheer nerve they had to contact her directly, knowing full well exactly who Serena was, to invite her to take part in their little tournament like they were doing her a favor. Their invitation was so patronizing! “Will earn the right to call themselves one of Lumiose’s strongest Trainers??” SHE WAS THE CHAMPION!!

They were belittling her while also implying that somehow Quasartico’s reach extended past Serena’s own dominion and authority as Champion by asserting they could offer her a “wish” she could not already fulfill herself. And if she participated, all the while, Quasartico could reap the benefits of having the backing of the Champion.
Well, this turned a bit dystopia. But it seems Quasartico is still in the early stages of setting up their dystopia. I imagine things will escalate as things go. This is reminding me of China with how they do surveillance.

AS IF!

Oh, Serena was pissed. Did they think she was stupid just because Serena hadn’t been in Kalos? That she wouldn’t see everything they were doing with this move? Serena was very smart, thank you very much.

If they wanted the Champion, then they’d get her. She’d join their stupid tournament, but only under the guise of complacency. If Serena’s name and title were affiliated, more people than ever before would flock to the tournament, and the world’s press would be watching. If more eyes were watching Quasartico than ever before, perfect.

Serena made absolutely no promises about not being an utter nuisance in their battle royale unlike they’d ever seen before. She’d make them regret inviting her and drawing the attention of every person in Kalos.

Quasartico really wanted to challenge Serena to a media battle? Oh, she’d chop them up and eat them for breakfast. Please, like they stood a chance against her on the mass media battlefield, let alone in a Pokemon battle.
Satisfying to see her flaunt her skills in this way. As mentioned in my previous review, she deserves to be able to after everything she went through to get there.

People constantly underestimated Serena because she was blonde and wore sparkles and pink. They wrote her off as an airheaded Champion who only beat an actress to get her title, and then ran away when she couldn’t handle the pressure.

People loved to look down on her as “just a ditzy little girl.” The masses convinced themselves that Serena must be a little pampered princess because they saw a young, pretty face in an unexpected position of power who flaunted their fame.
Hmm, but the previous Champion sounds like the weakest in the franchise, so it doesn't say as much about Serenas power compared to other Champions.

It’s like everyone collectively forgot just how vicious Serena could be, the fact that she’d set the record for fastest time to become Champion, and that no one had come even close to usurping her in five years. Serena was no angel, nor did she ever claim to be. Serena was a melodramatic, petty, nosy, overly-competitive instigator who would beat you up, take your money, and do it in style.
I assume you mean beat up as in beat in a mon battle and the money would be the reward resulting from it?

Just because she had manners, elegance, and a sense of justice didn’t make Serena any less of a conniving mastermind who knew she was better than you. Her accidental subterfuge of making everyone think she’s simple and dumb really was the greatest prank Serena’s ever played. Her ghosts would be so proud!
I do like her sass and playfulness. 😎

Quasartico was always watching and spying, hm?

Fine.

Serena would tear down their castle and get Kalos and the whole world to watch Quasartico back. Every move they made would be monitored with a finely toothed comb. Let’s let Quasartico be the ones experiencing psychological terror for a change as Serena installed a new panopticon. More eyes meant more people to witness their deceit first hand as Serena calculatedly destroyed them while looking fabulous doing it.

They wanted a show? They’d get one.
I like how all this and the previous sections help explain in abundantly clear detail why she is going to enter and what she plans to do. Maybe you could argue this is more than needed, but I enjoy watching her be confident, and really don't mind!

By asking her to join the Z-A Royale, Quasartico had given her the keys to the kingdom and was inviting Serena to wreck their entire lives with open arms. And she’d do it with a smile on her face and a pep in her step.

Quasartico had no idea who they were dealing with.

Completely misreading her pause, Urbain commented,
Oh, right! I forgot we were in the middle of a conversation! :unquag:

“I also got that message out of the blue after I did some battling here in Lumiose. It was a shock. The bigwigs around here really want to find a crop of strong Trainers!”

“You don’t find that odd at all?” Serena questioned skeptically. He wasn’t that simple, was he?
Yes he is that simple! Seriously, Serena. He needs you far more than he realizes! :mewlulz:

“Er, what do you mean?” Urbain asked.

“That they contacted you out of the blue,” she elaborated.

Urbain nodded and grinned, proud. “Word of mouth travels fast! If people are talking about me that much, it means I have a lot of potential as a Trainer, dontcha think?”

She’d expected too much of him. He really was gullible. “You didn’t give your phone number or email to anyone you battled during that time though, did you?”

“No, that would be weird. It’s not like any of them were that interesting either,” he dismissed.

She was going to have to spell it out for him wasn’t she? How could someone this cute be this dense?
Because density and cuteness have no correlation! :unquag:

Serena sighed. “Let’s say you’re right, and it was truly word of mouth, how did Quasartico find your contact information? All they had to go on was probably “that guy Urbain, I think!” and “he was blonde.” That’s not exactly helpful information in a city this big. And even if they did manage to track you down, it would have taken a long time. You got that message immediately. Don’t you find that weird?”

Serena didn’t want her new friend to be sucked into their lies. That, and she was using him as a case example to see how the average person would react when confronted with the truth. How much did people really not know what was going on?
Can't fault her reasoning here. Great how you include these kinds of details.

Urbain blinked. “Huh, it is unusual now that you mention it, actually. What’s your point here?”

“My point is that I told no one that I was coming to Kalos, let alone to Lumiose City. You were the first person I talked to after arriving here. The media has been silent and does not know about me being in Kalos.” Serena glared at the message still displayed on her Rotom Phone. “How did Quasartico know? And how did they track down my personal private phone number, which no one should have beyond close friends, within a few hours and then knew to wait to send me that message until I had woken up at the very odd time of 4:00 pm?”

Urbain’s eyes flew wide. “Oh. Oh. I see. That shouldn’t be possible.”

“No, it shouldn’t,” Serena agreed.

“Flo…” Floette closed her eyes solemnly in agreement.

“…This is really not good, is it?” Urbain gulped.
No, Urbain. It's amazing. We love systematic control by cold ruthless establishments that want to turn us all into mindless cogs in their manipulative machine!

“Correct, but “not good” isn’t really the term I’d use. “Complete structural unethical behavior and total illegal invasion of privacy of the masses” is more apt in this case.” Serena made a note not to forget to discover whatever other skeletons the company had in their closet too.
Which there are likely several of. :copyka:

“Shit.” Urbain was silent for a beat. “…Okay, what are we going to do about it?”

Serena rolled her eyes. “We will be doing nothing. I, on the other hand, will be handling this as is my job.”

“C’mon, you can’t just drop that on me and expect me to do nothing!” he argued back. Urbain couldn’t just sit there! “I’m the helpful type of guy, remember? Besides, protecting Lumiose City is kind of my thing. I was gonna ask you anyways, but now it’s more pressing. Please, join Team MZ!” he begged.

Team MZ?” Serena asked incredulously. Not another damn Team! And a Team sunshine boy was on? Oh no, who tricked him!
I love how she defaults to 'who tricked him'! :mewlulz:

“Yep! We’re a team dedicated to protecting Lumiose City and all its inhabitants,” Urbain announced grandly. “I’m the team leader. There’s only a few other members, and we’re based out of Hotel Z.”

“Don’t be stupid, you’ll only get hurt if you stick with that.” Serena didn’t want him to head down that road. Protection was a nice goal, but it would involve him sticking his nose into things he shouldn’t. It would only jeopardize his safety.

“What, and you won’t?” he challenged heatedly. “You might be a super strong Trainer, but you’re still at just as much risk! Let us help you.”

Serena shook her head. “Why would you– you’re putting yourself in a lot of danger here! This is not your fight!” Serena vehemently rejected.

“But it is my fight – it’s all of our fights,” Urbain asserted, resolute. “We live here in Lumiose too. This is our city. It’s our responsibility to take care of it.”
He has a point, but Serena's point is better.

‘No, it isn’t! IT’S MINE! It’s my responsibility to protect you, and I FAILED!’ she wanted to scream at him, but forced herself to be silent. Serena couldn’t say that to someone who looked at her like she meant something and trusted her as a Champion.
Ah, but the problem is that she is still only a person underneath all that. People have limits both physically and mentally and she had reached her mental limit with everything that happened. But her thoughts are understandable. It is her job to be there to prevent this kind of crap.

Capitalizing on her hesitance, Urbain slyly said, “If you say no, we’re just gonna follow you around anyways. And after your reunion with AZ last night, I know there’s no way you’d leave Hotel Z to avoid me. So either way, if Lumiose’s safety is at risk, we’re getting involved and helping.”

Floette delicately placed her hand on Serena’s face, looked her in the eyes, and nodded. Floette understood what Serena was feeling, and silently offered her approval. It wouldn’t be like last time.

‘It would be okay,’ Serena assured herself. She’d protect them. Serena could. She could.
You can't be everywhere at once, Serena. These other guys are getting in way over their heads... Floette can only be one place at a time too. I guess let Floette watch over Urbain, but the others on that "team" are screwed and you won't be able to help. Ok there is one way you can help... Split your Champion team among them. Loan out your strongest mon to protect them and keep one back for yourself. Maybe then you can keep them all safe.

There would never be another body crushed under the rubble again.
Ah, in that case, people can die. We've got some proper stakes at play here! :eyes:

“…if you start calling me “grunt,” I will punch you,” Serena mumbled reluctantly.
So you're telling Urbain that all he has to do to get your physical touch is to call you 'grunt'? :eyes: I do see some potential for backfiring here... :mewlulz:

Urbain chuckled. “Noted.” He jumped up out of the chair and pumped his fist in the air. “I’m so thrilled, I’m getting goosebumps! Thank you. This means a ton! Welcome to Team MZ. We’re lucky to have you.”

“Yes, you are lucky to have me. Can I trust you’ll keep silent about everything I just told you unless you have my approval? This is very strict league business. It’s important you stay quiet.” She really hoped she didn’t make a massive mistake bringing this up to him.

“Absolutely, you can count on me!” he assured her. “With you on our side, we’ll win the Z-A Royale for su– er, um, I guess the Z-A Royale is a bust then? I should drop out too. Shit, that changes everything.”

Serena waved her hand. “No, no, I’m signing up.”

“HUH?!” Urbain exclaimed. “But I thought…”

“No, you’re correct in your thinking. The Z-A Royale is bound to be a farce, and that company is ludicrously corrupt. But since they’re so graciously asking for my presence, who am I to reject their summons?” Serena cackled nefariously at the message on her Rotom Phone.

“Okaaaaay, not gonna lie, I’m a little lost. They’re the bad guys here, right? Why are you doing what they want?” Urbain really wasn’t the multi-level planning thinking ten moves ahead of your opponent kind of guy. He was the “gut reaction, act first, and deal with it later” type. It’s why he sucked at chess.
Oh... Serena played him at chess before? I thought she just met him? If this bit is what Urbain thinks of himself, it seems odd he would understand why he sucks at chess. Is this Flottes impression of him? Did Flotte see Urbain play chess? Does Urbain play chess with AZ? Does Urbain play chess with Flotte? So many questions!

“It will be even easier to take them down by joining.” Serena smirked, a fire in her eyes. “They’ve practically presented their own demise on a golden platter for me. How kind of them.”

Urbain resigned that he probably wouldn’t fully understand what she was talking about until he thought about it a lot more. And probably had several more explanations. Urbain wasn’t stupid by any means, but this was scheming at a level that was a little above his usual pay grade.
Yeah. Easier to just smile and nod.

“Still not really following, so you’ll have to fill the team and I in on the full plan later. Lemme see your Rotom Phone for a sec, and I’ll set up the app for you!” Urbain offered. Serena handed over her phone. “I can put in my contact info while I’m at it.”

‘Yes! Phone number secured! Very smooth, Urbain!’ he celebrated in his head.
Urbain is, in fact, the man. 😎

*Installing… Z-A Royale app successfully installed.*
You know, I'd be worried about installing an app from them, but it seems like their holotech already has voice recognition, advanced facial imaging software(Good enough to see through Serena's disguise), wireless automatic hacking, and probably several other invasive things going on already. Wouldn't surprise me if they already had access to all the information in all the phones of all the people in that city. Heck they probably have AI analyzing the texts and have recordings of all the phone calls of everyone in the city.

So yeah, I doubt installing the app gives them any more access than they already had since they probably already have access to everything. 💀

“Okay, the app’s ready. Let’s get you all signed up in the Z-A Royale. And we gotta make sure you’ve got the Team MZ look in your profile pic! Here you go – your official Team MZ gear.” Urbain took out a green and black Team MZ jacket and handed it to her. “Proof that you’re one of us!” He thought the jacket looked pretty snazzy!

Serena eyed the jacket in her hands hesitantly. “I said I’d join your team, not that I’d make it my whole personality.” Upon seeing Urbain’s crestfallen look, Serena quickly rephrased, “I appreciate the gesture and will keep the jacket, but I’m not wearing it during my time here. Announcing to the tournament that I’m in Team MZ doesn’t really do anything for us. There’s a much… bigger statement I’m making with this current outfit, and I won’t jeopardize that to wear a team jacket.”

Urbain winced. “Not gonna lie, that stings. I guess I’ll just have to find some other way to stamp my claim on you.”
With statements like that, I bet Serena will be thinking of a few ways... :eyes: Daaaang Urbain! You're bolder than I thought! 😎

Serena blinked. “…Excuse me?” He did not just say what she thought he did!
Oh yes he did. And don't try to pretend you don't secretly like it. :mewlulz: The tough girl always having to protect everyone and take responsibility? There is part of you that wants the exact opposite.

“I MEAN– um, the TEAM’S CLAIM! Sorry!” Urbain sputtered feverishly, his face red. “Can’t have the Battle Connoisseurs or anyone else thinking they can recruit you, right? I think I’m still in shock from the previous revelation! Don’t think about it too much,” he deflected terribly. “And anyways, you look beautiful– I mean, your outfit looks great! Yeah, that! It would be a shame to cover it up! You’re sooooo right! What was I even thinking about with the jacket? Hahahahaha!!” Jeez! SO not smooth, Urbain!

“F-f-f-f-f-flo!” Floette laughed hysterically.

“Uh-huh. Sure,” Serena deadpanned, not at all impressed by his lackluster recovery.
I don't know about that. His recovery is either entirely accidental or perfectly planned. But since we have seen he can't plan worth a crap, it means it's genuine and that makes it all the more effective. 😎

He deflated. There really wasn’t a way to recover from that one. “I’ll just shut up now and take your profile photo.”

“Good idea. I have an idea for a photo in mind.” It was time to teach Urbain a thing or two about production value. “Sensei, Gattaca, Cheshire come on out!” She tossed their Pokeballs, and the three emerged. “Okay, the goal here guys is to make an uber girly and as unintimidating of a photo as possible!”

Urbain faltered. “Wait, what? Shouldn’t you try to–”

“Shush, you,” Serena demurred. “What happened to shutting up?”

“Right! Shutting up now.”
It's important to know when to shut up and listen. Urbain knows just what to do!

Cheshire, her adorable perfect cuddly giant teddy-bear of a Gengar who could do no wrong peered up curiously at her. “Geng?”
Wow that's a great nickname for a Gengar!

“We’re doing a prank!” Serena delightedly informed him. No, she did not play favorites among her Pokemon.

“Gen, gengar!!” Cheshire rubbed his little grubby hands together and chuckled maliciously, his Glasgow grin stretching wider across his face until it was distortedly ear to ear.

“Cheshire, you’re on effects!” Serena assigned. “I want you to float from above and drop flowers on us. Dazzling Gleam from behind too, of course.”

“Gen!” Cheshire acknowledged. He floated through the wall of the lobby, going outside to wander around and pick flowers.

“Sensei, you’re on lighting!” she directed. “You’re going to use your Water Shuriken and hold them in your hands to make lenses that catch the sunlight. Emphasis on bounce and fill lights! We want soft lighting.”
There seems to be quite a bit of thought put into the production of her photo-op. I'm not expert on that stuff, but this seems on point.

“Gre!” It wasn’t the first time Sensei had been assigned this job, so he knew what to do.

“And finally, Gattaca.” Serena gave her a reluctant assessing look. “You’re the most… conventionally cute out of the team.”

Gattaca snorted. “Syl, Sylveon!” She was the cutest! Gattaca might not actually want to be cute, but she better be after all the shit she went through!

Serena rolled eyes and waved her off. “Don’t kid yourself, that’s obviously Cheshire. But you are the most unintimidating.”

“VEE! Veon! Syl!” Gattaca stormed, insulted.

“You have no right to complain. Let’s not forget that this,” she gestured to all of Sylveon, “was your choice. So you get the honor of being in the photo with me. Really show off your unintimidating adorable self by jumping in my arms and cuddling with me lovingly as you wrap your ribbons around me.”

Gattaca was probably the only Sylveon out there who evolved into one because she wanted to spite her Trainer out of an Umbreon and accomplished that by loving her too much so Serena would end up with the exact opposite, a Fairy-type. Gattaca loved her trainer, obviously, she was clearly a Sylveon, but it was love motivated by long-game petty revenge.

“Vee,” Gattaca scoffed. She wasn’t doing that! She was fierce! NO!
I love how they jab at each other regarding Gattaca not being an Umbreon. She uses Gattaca's petty revenge against her! :mewlulz:

“You’re going to look adorable, and you’re going to be happy about it!” Serena berated her. She was still a little miffed about the whole Cleffa thing.
Wonderful callback! :mewlulz:

Gattaca clicked her tongue and stubbornly looked off to the side.

“…I’ll give you four PokePuffs,” Serena relented, knowing exactly what her Sylveon actually was aiming for here.

“Syl~!” Gattaca chimed happily, now fully on board to do the photo.

“Gen~gar!” Cheshire floated back through the wall doing a cartwheel, flowers in hand.

Serena lit up. “That’s perfect! Great job, Cheshire! I knew I could count on you unlike someone.” She side eyed Gattaca.

“Vee,” Gattaca made a noise of discontent.

“Five PokePuffs,” Serena said blandly.

“Vee~!”
This whole interaction made me laugh. :mewlulz: Ugh, I'm so simple minded. Whatever, I'm just going to enjoy it. Bite me...

“We’re good to go. Urbain, are you ready to take the picture?” She turned to him. “Make sure it’s a medium close-up. So waist and above, and try to fill the frame as best you can with the two of us. Not a lot of head space, and center us in the frame.”
Nice job of describing the shot.

“Huh?” Urbain snapped out of his daze watching her direct her Pokemon. “I mean, yeah, got it! Medium close-up it is! Sorry, watching you with your Pokemon is kinda great!” He took out his Rotom Phone.
I bet he was looking at her far more than her mon...

“Places everyone!” Serena clapped. “On your signal, Urbain.”

Urbain called out, “Lights, camera, action!”

*SNAP*

“Looks great!” He admired the photo. “I’ll send it over so you can finish signing up!”

Serena grinned mischievously upon seeing the photo Urbain texted her. It was stupidly adorable, wholesome, and with way too much joyous emotion – It really made her look like a massive ditz who loved Fairy-types. It was everything Serena was not.

It was perfect!
I have to say, I agree with her reasoning and planning. This will make her look gullible and non-threatening so her opponents consistently underestimate her.

She returned her Pokemon to their Pokeballs, completed the Z-A Royale profile, and hit submit. The notification popped up: *You have now officially entered the Z-A Royale!*

Urbain couldn’t wait to see her seriously battle live and in person! “There you go – all set! Like it shows, you start out at Rank Z. And your goal is to climb from the bottom all the way to Rank A at the top,” he informed her.
Ooo I like ranking systems! And so many of them too! :eyes:

If Urbain set the photo he took of Serena as his phone background, no one needed to know.
Man, I probably would too in Urbain's shoes. Especially with her in that mini-skirt! :unquag:

AZ walked over slowly. “How nice it is to see so much energy so… early in the day.” You never expect to be hit with AZ’s sarcasm, but he saved it for when it was the most opportune moment.

“Yes, good morning, AZ,” Serena bantered.

“Good morning,” AZ joked back. “I could not help overhearing earlier. It puts my mind at ease to know that you will join the Z-A Royale, Serena.” He closed his eyes, deeply feeling the city’s pain. “Lumiose bustles today with Pokemon and people, but beneath the surface lurks a terrible grief. I hope you will claim victory in the Z-A Royale… so we might free Lumiose at last.”

“Not “might,” will,” Serena refuted. “We will free Lumiose, AZ.” She wouldn’t accept anything less.

AZ’s expression softened. “To that end, you should explore the city day and night. Get to re-know her Pokemon and her people. Such bonds will be sure to help you.”
That makes some sense. Knowing the people who live there better allows one to make decisions that best allows them to be better off. Since Serena's goal is to help the city, knowing the inhabitants will make her better equipped for the task.

AZ had clearly heard her and Urbain’s conversation earlier. He was telling her not to reject Team MZ and to let people help her. She didn’t have to go it alone. While that was reassuring, it didn’t change the fact that Serena felt responsible for this entire debacle. She’d maybe accept some help, but it was still her mess to clean up.
I suppose another thing is that Serena needs to sleep and she can only be one place at a time. The help of others might be useful since she doesn't know the full scope of what she is up against.

“AZ’s right!” Urbain chimed in. “I think Lumiose’s future will be a lot more secure with you in it.” And he was back to his usual charm.
Yes... until he accidentally strikes again with the next thing that makes your heart race! 😏

“Flooo!” Floette agreed with a twirl.

“And don’t worry,” Urbain continued. “I’ll help you get readapted to the city! The number-one thing a Trainer in Lumiose nowadays should know is… how to roll!”

“You don’t get to be Champion without knowing how to roll. I’ve done more than my fair share of dodging.” Serena didn’t even want to think about the sheer number of near death situations she’d been in over the years.
Ah, I assume this is a reference to the events of canon.

Urbain eyed her skirt. “…Can you roll in a miniskirt?”

Serena raised an eye brow. “Yes.” Urbain seemed oblivious to her judgement and continued to stare at her skirt.
He just wants an excuse to check out her legs. He perfectly emulates knowing what he is doing! :veelove:

The elevator dinged. Lida walked out and immediately criticized, “Urbain, could you turn it down, like two notches?” She turned on a dime to look at AZ. “Can’t you shush ‘em, AZ? Yell at ‘em a little?”
Huh? Who is this gal? And how could she possibly understand the situation quickly enough to tell Urbain to turn it down?

Urbain does not turn it down! Urbain does not tolerate challenges to his dominance of Serena! Urbain tells the Lida to silence its incessant mouth flapping! :unquag:

“It would be unseemly for me to shout and scold… especially since I have been enjoying their antics,” AZ muffled a laugh. “Team MZ’s new member would be more likely to scold me if I even tried to shout at her.”

“NEW MEMBER?!” Lida screeched. No way!! A new member!

Urbain snickered. “Weren’t you just complaining about me being loud, Lida?” he mocked.

Lida shook her head, and turned to the apparent new member. “Fair, sor– wait, Serena?!”

“Lida?” Serena marveled. “Oh my gosh, it’s been years! How are you?” The last time she saw Lida was before Serena departed for Hoenn. They’d grabbed coffee and gossiped about Tierno.
What IS this Tierno it speaks of? The mighty Urbain is not impressed.

“Much better now,” Lida breathed. “Honestly, we have so much to get caught up on. Don’t even get me started on Tierno…” she trailed off, not even sure where to begin on that front.
Fine. The Urbain will consider this as a 'noodle incident' as far as his purposes are concerned.

Yikes, I must be careful or Urbain will take over my review! Bad Urbain. BAD!

Noticing her internal discord, Serena jumped in, “Girls night?”

Lida brightened. “Yes!! Most definitely!!”

Urbain laughed. “You already know half the team! See? You were meant to join!”

“Serena, how the hell did this idiot,” Lida jabbed her thumb at Urbain, “convince you of all people to join our team?”

“Wow, love the support for your team leader, Lida,” Urbain jeered bluntly.

“Well, he actually threatened to stalk me indefinitely if I didn’t join,” Serena answered casually.

Urbain jolted. “WAIT!!”

Lida, disappointed, but not surprised, leveled a stink eye at Urbain. “Really?”

Serena nodded, then continued to fill Lida in on the tale, “And then he tried to force me to wear a team jacket so he could stake his claim on me.”
Oh this is GREAT! 🤣

“I SAID I DIDN’T MEAN IT LIKE THAT!!” Urbain was completely red, his face matched the tips of his hair.

Lida, now uber-disappointed, glared at Urbain. “Is that so?” she said flatly.
Dang Serena. That was pretty savage. Especially considering the secret you keep even from yourself that you liked it... (Technically my head-canon, but I wouldn't be surprised if it hit the mark.)

Oh, she sees how it is. Urbain had a budding crush on Serena, but Urbain most definitely put his foot in his mouth several times. Because of course he would. It was Urbain. His lines were either accidentally incredibly smooth or a total train wreck. But still, “staking his claim”? Really, Urbain? Arceus, this was just the start, wasn’t it? Urbain was going to be even more insufferable and cringy now that he had a crush.

To be fair, Lida super understood Urbain on this one, because same. Serena had been her first crush once upon a time. When Tierno first introduced Serena to her all those years ago, Lida had gotten swept up in how fun and bright she was. Lida had since gotten over it, it was never anything more than an innocent puppy crush, but she would always be a little dazzled by Serena. Now, Serena was like the cool older sister she always wished she had. She was a confidant filled with advice and experience Lida desperately needed right now.

And Lida finally had someone to gossip with again! Especially about the two numbskulls in Team MZ. Ugh, they could be so exhausting.

“I MEANT THE TEAM’S CLAIM!! SO SHE WOULDN’T GET POACHED BY OTHER GROUPS!” he attempted to explain.

“Uh-huh, sure you did.” Lida shook her head, and sighed. “Arceus, I’m so glad you’re here, Serena. Now I don’t have to suffer through listening to this mess,” she waved her hand at Urbain, “alone anymore.”

“LIDA!”

“It must have been so painful.” Serena reassuringly hugged her. “Don’t worry, I’m here now. We can make fun of him and talk about him behind his back together all we want.”
Urbain... how the mighty have fallen... 😔

“HEY!”

The two girls erupted into giggles.

“What were you two even doing down here anyways?” Lida questioned, still shaking off the giggles.

Serena adjusted her hat. “Urbain was helping me register for the Z-A Royale.”

“You’re going to join?!” Lida raised her hand to cover her mouth in shock. “Wait, is that even allowed?”

“It’s more than allowed, seeing as Quasartico themselves extended an invitation to me,” Serena provided. Oh, they would soon come to rue the day they did!

“We’ve got the Team MZ win in the bag!” Lida rejoiced. “You’ll decimate your opponents easily!” She made fierce punching motions in the air.

“Right!” Urbain agreed, his face considerably less red. “Let's scope out the next potential battle zone!”
Well, Urbain certainly recovers quickly...

“Not so fast.” Serena wanted to nip that line of thinking in the bud. “Look, if I’m doing this for real, then it’s not good sportsmanship if I use my Champion team. It would be a PR nightmare if the media found out!” She had to make herself look perfect to the media if her plan was going to work.
Whaaat. That is not making sense to me. Where is all her confidence coming from if she isn't going to use her Champion team? There is no good reason I can think of that she should be disallowed from using it. Even if she can train another team and knows how to train a team, there is no reason for her to have that much confidence since other trainers will have more experienced teams. If she encounters a Cool Trainer from victory road with her new team, she will be destroyed.

Urbain rubbed the back of his head. “You’re right, I got a little ahead of myself there.”

“Eeehhh??” Lida exclaimed in disbelief. “Don’t tell me you’re going to start all over again!”

Sensei emerged from his Pokeball on his own, looking disturbed and upset. This is new information to him!!

“I’m not benching you permanently, Sensei.” Her Greninja could be such a big baby sometimes! “But even beating up new trainers gets old after a while, you have to admit.”
Old or not, if her goal is to wreck things, it makes no sense not to use the best mon available to her.

“Nin,” Sensei pouted, refusing to agree, and determinedly did not make eye contact.

“Fine.” Serena gave in much too easily. She could never say no to him. “What if I keep you in the party, but you don’t get to fight until the more serious trainers appear.” Sensei perked up a little at that.
That's a little more sensible...

“So let’s go to the wild zone just down the street!” Urbain suggested. She could catch some new Pokemon there!

Serena shook her head, eyes gleaming. “No, I have somewhere much more fitting in mind.”

“Oh no…” Lida mumbled under her breath, grimacing. She knew where that was going.

“Oh, where? Do you have some secret Champion knowledge?” he probed. If there was insider info, Urbain wanted to know about it!

“The cemetery!” Serena beamed, looking so happy at the thought that she was actually sparkling.

Urbain scrunched his eyebrows, confused. “The cemetery…?” Sensei patted Urbain’s shoulder sympathetically.

Defeated, Lida hung her head. “Of course you want to go to the cemetery.”

“Yes! This is an excellent chance to train some Pokemon I’ve always wanted to add to the team, but never could because my other Pokemon refused to let me switch them out! Ha-ha!” Her team were such possessive little miscreants! They never allowed her to switch them out of the main party.

“Er, but you just let Greninja– sorry, Sensei stay on the team? Won’t they protest too?” Urbain questioned.

Serena smirked victoriously. “Oh, they will, but Sensei has seniority as my first ever Pokemon. They can pout all they want, but Sensei is an exception that they can’t deny!”

Sensei nodded in agreement. Yes, he was better than them.
Only having one stronger mon... that seems like a mistake. If she encounters a strong opponent with type advantage she could have trouble. Would be best to have two from her Champion team, just in case. Then again, I doubt she is the type to have a solid contingency... She is too confident in herself for that. I wonder if that will come back to bite her in the butt later?

“Besides,” Serena lovingly pet Sensei’s head. “Sensei, even back when he was a Froakie, acted like a know-it-all wise old man who's been through many perilous wars. He tries to corral the rest of the team and teach them things as if being on the team 2 weeks longer than them had somehow given him secret elite knowledge and it was his duty to impart it to them. The rest of the team won’t deny Sensei the chance to be a sensei for real.” No, they’d laugh hysterically at him and revel in it.

The Greninja squawked, the rug pulled out from under him. Don’t make him look stupid!!

Serena beamed at him. “Sensei, you can finally live up to your dreams and help me train up your new teammates!”

Sensei croaked, suddenly placated. Yeah, he did want to teach some younglings while showing off how much better than them he was.
It's a win-win! (Also, I love how this angle plays into his selection.)

“But still, why the cemetery?” Urbain pressed.

Lida cringed, and hid her face in her hands. She knew exactly what that response was going to be. No doubt the same answer Serena gave when Lida asked her the same thing years ago.

“Because Ghost and Dark-types are just the cutest!!” Serena clasped her hands together in front of her and sighed dreamily. “I’ve always wanted an Aegislash! They’re so noble and regal! And a Zoroark! They’re sooo adorable and fluffy!”
I think Cynthia would say the same kinds of things except her emphasis would also include dragons.

“To each their own, I guess?” Suddenly, her team composition made a lot more sense to Urbain.

Honestly, Serena never really understood why people were so confused when they learned she was a Ghost and Dark-type specialist. Just because Serena preferred colors, glitz, and glamor and didn’t dress like a Hex Maniac or have a goth aesthetic didn’t mean she couldn’t specialize in Ghost and Dark-types.
Ok, she has a point but the fact that she has to defend it means she is in the extreme minority.

Serena related to them more than any other type – the maximum drama, the sob stories, the balance between working in the shadows and the spotlight, the childish whimsy, the plight of the misunderstood, the unyielding desire to make chaos for the fun of it happen, and the undeniable will to thrive despite lofty trauma.

Ghost-types were flashy, they wanted attention, drama, and laughter. They wanted to cause problems and enjoy the fall out.
Huh, something tells me that Agatha was exactly like Serena when Agatha was younger...

Ghost Pokemon came back from the dead. They wanted to live and enjoy the simple things in life regardless of the terrible circumstances that begot their death. Ghost Pokemon loved life more than any other. Reducing them to solely being an incantation of death as most did was wrong, they represented the continuing cycle of the world and rebirth.

Ghost Pokemon were the bridge between life and death, between destruction and creation.

Dark-types were similarly outcast. They also carried stigma, many believing Dark-types were evil and nefarious in nature. It wasn’t true, and raised the question of did Dark-types retreat to the darkness and adopt their careful characteristics because they were shunned, or did their hyper-vigilance make them at home in the shadows? Dark-types lived on the fringe of society, often misunderstood and mischaracterized. They recognized the need to work in the shadows and when to step into the spotlight.

Dark-types saw the balance of conflict, the reciprocal nature of “good” and “bad,” and carefully traversed it. The stronger the light, the darker the shadow, and one can’t exist without the other.

Serena resonated with them both very much, and in turn, they thrived on her subtle chaos melodrama agenda.
This bit is pretty nifty to see her reasoning behind these types.

Also, perhaps I should include why my MC prefers Fire in my own fic? I probably should. I think that was an oversight... 🤔

It took a very special kind of person to look at Yveltal, the hulking giant death god of a bird, and think he’s absolutely adorable and just a little misunderstood guy! She adorned him with bows and ribbons. There was a reason why Lemis stuck around and was completely content with being a part of Serena’s team.

“Before we get to the cemetery though, I’d like to stop by a Pokemon Center.” Serena was not at all looking forward to the Pokemon Center visit, but it couldn’t be helped. She had to stock up on items, especially if she was training new Pokemon.

“Alright!” Urbain quickly assessed his mental map. “There’s a Pokemon Center just around the corner.” Urbain darted out the door.

“Will you be coming, Lida?” Serena asked. “I have these wonderful glasses that are an incredible disguise. No one will hound us.” Serena took out the glasses from her tote and put them on.

“Nope! You two have fun in the cemetery. I’m totally okay not joining you on this one!” Lida waved her hands in front of her with a slightly alert look, then quickly sat down in one of the lobby’s chairs. “Go ahead, really! I’m good!” Lida did NOT like ghosts! Nope! She was a beach and ocean girl, not a cemetery girl!!
Well, like most girls, I would imagine!

Also, Lida had no interest in third wheeling on Serena and Urbain’s absolutely insane cemetery pseudo first date! Lida had to give Urbain props for not being scared off by the “I love dead and creepy shit” thing Serena had going on.
Nah, not when one has that big of a crush! :quag:

“Alright, your loss.” Lumiose’s graveyard was beautiful after all. It has some very stunning crypts and effigies. Not to mention the most gorgeous mausoleum Serena had ever seen. It was a work of art! After exploring it many times, Serena had actually found a hidden entrance to the sealed off Lumiose catacombs! Once Serena ensured she wouldn’t get lost forever down there, she fully intended to explore it! Imagine what ghosties must have made homes there!

Serena skipped out the door, head flooded with dreams of perfect new team additions. Eeee! She couldn’t wait!

“Well, this is a problem... What do you think is the deal here, Serena?” Urbain stared in disbelief at the huge rocks blocking the street in front of him.

“Do any of your Pokemon happen to know Rock Smash?” Serena sighed. None of hers did, and she really didn’t want to change their move sets.

“Nope! But there’s no way the Hotel will get any guests with these boulders in the way. Oh well, I know a special route, follow me!” He ran around the corner and climbed up a ladder on the side of a nearby building.

Serena climbed after him. “Ugh, how can you be so chipper about visiting a Pokemon Center?”

Urbain hopped up onto the roof. “Pokemon Centers are the best! You can’t diss free health care for Pokemon!” He reached out his hand and helped Serena up after him.

“Arceus, I envy you,” Serena bemoaned as she dusted off her skirt. “Pokemon Center nurses have decided they all hate me for no reason.”
Well that is unusual! I bet it's due to all the trainers she beat having to come get healed. It increased their workload! I bet it got so bad they developed a Serena alert system to notify nearby Pokemon Centers when Serena was in the area! :unquag:

Either that or they were jealous of her mini-skirt.

“‘Cmon, it can’t be that bad. I’m sure you’re exaggerating.” Urbain had quickly picked up on the fact that Serena was very dramatic and reveled in it. He jumped down from terrace to terrace until he landed on the street below. Serena jumped alongside him with no hesitation. “Obviously, that’s a one-way route, so we’ll find another way back,” Urbain noted, but he could figure that out later. “Now we’re almost to our goal! Let’s head to the Pokemon Center!”

“I’m definitely not exaggerating,” she asserted. “They hate me. It’s such a hassle to go to the Pokemon Center because of it. I’m hopeful that this time will be different.” Serena clenched her hand into a fist and determinedly stared at the Pokemon Center in the distance. “I have my glasses after all, there’s a chance they won’t recognize me!” Serena marched into the Pokemon Center.

“Enchantée! Is this your first visit to a Pokemon Center in this city?” the nurse asked.

‘Damn, these glasses are putting in work!! Maybe the attendant will finally be nice to me!’ She was delighted!

“It’s not my first visit, but it is my first time here in five years,” Serena answered lightly, carefully trying not to piss off the nurse.

“Five years? Oh, my, so much has changed in five years. Why, you must be overwhelmed with how much has happened since you’ve been gone,” the lady noted with thinly veiled sarcasm that did not at all match her bright “Pokemon Center” attendee smile.

No! Serena’s hopes of having a normal Pokemon Center visit for once were dust in the wind. She absolutely recognized her!

“Might I also recommend that you install the Pokedex app on your phone? There’s a promotion underway right now – if you catch five Pokemon species and register them in your Pokedex, there’s a prize in it for you! Alors – how about it? Ready to install the Pokedex app?” The woman’s eyes gleamed.

Serena cursed, she clearly was trying to cause a problem for her, but Serena hadn’t figured out her angle yet.

Serena dug into her tote and pulled out her Pokedex. She held it up to the nurse. “Are these being discontinued?”

“Oh my! That’s practically an antique!” she commented haughty, raising a hand to her chin and looking down at Serena.

Serena’s eye brow twitched. “Is there backwards compatibility?”

“Nope! Why would there be?” the nurse declared gleefully with a mocking grin. “There’s no need to service something so,” she looked Serena up and down, “outdated.”

A vein bulged on Serena’s forehead. The Pokemon Center nurses were always SO passive aggressive with her! WHY?! What the hell did Serena do to turn every Pokemon Center nurse against her! She wanted to know!

It’s not like it could have been the policies Serena supported, she was pro-union! But this began way before she was Champion and all the way back at the start of her journey! Did something about Serena just scream “nurses please hate me”?
Hmm I'm pretty curious why, but my theories above still stand.

“Fine, I’ll download the Pokedex app,” Serena forced out through gritted teeth and a fake smile. How dare this nurse make all of her Pokedex progress, years of work, worthless!!!

“Wonderful!” The nurse's grin was so so self-satisfied. Serena could tell the attendant knew exactly what she did and probably couldn’t wait to brag about it to the other nurses! “Thank you very much for downloading the new Pokedex app! Once you catch five different species of Pokemon and register them in your Pokedex, please report your success to the Pokemon Research Lab.”

Oh, Serena was NOT going to let this stupid woman pull one over on her. She’d be reporting to the Lab alright, and she’d FORCE them to port over her Pokedex! Did Serena really care about the Pokedex? No. But fuck this lady! Serena wasn’t going to let her win!

“Great, sure, thanks so much!” Serena tried to make her sarcasm as overt as possible. If the nurse was going to be a bitch, she’d be a bitch right back. “Now that the unwilling unsolicited disturbance is over, can I please buy some items?” Serena fluttered her lashes and widened her grin.
Hmm I don't like the word 'unwilling' in this. Maybe 'unsolicited' would work better?

The nurse narrowed her eyes ever so slightly, but never dropped her smile. “Yes, of course you can! Here’s our selection.”

A holographic screen popped up displaying the current inventory. Serena scrolled through the items, but quickly noticed that there were a lot missing. This was just the bare minimum! Just potions, Pokeballs, status heals. No Ultra Balls, max revives, or vitamins?

“I really hate to be a bother,” Serena started with absolutely no sincerity and the widest fakest smile, “but your selection seems rather limited. Are you sure you didn’t make an error on your end?”

“There’s been no error, this is what’s available to you,” the employee chirped.
Available... to you. It seems they are limiting their selection.

Serena clicked her tongue, but kept her grin strong. She would not be out done by this woman! “I have 8 Gym Badges, I should be able to see the full selection of Pokemon Center offerings.”

“Yes, this is the full selection of what’s available to you,” the nurse emphasized, her smile sharpening ever so slightly into a smirk.

Serena’s smile turned rigid, and she held herself back from snapping at her that she wasn’t even a real nurse anyways! Pokemon Center employees that worked at mini-centers like this were just attendants, not actual nurses! You didn’t need a medical license to operate the healing machine! An idiot could do it!

This lady was no better than a superficial decoration!

And to think, Serena still advocated for this woman’s rights to be paid a fair wage!!

“I see,” Serena quipped, beaming. “I’ll take 20 Pokeballs, 30 potions, and 5 of each of the heals… Please.”

The woman’s eyes widened in shock and brought her hand up to cover her mouth. “Oh my, that’s quite a lot, are you sure you can afford that?”

Serena laughed the fakest laugh she’d ever made. “Yes, I’m sure.” Serena scrunched her nose and smiled so pinched that it looked like she might be in pain. “You’re just so good at your job for checking.”

From off to the side and completely out of notice of the two women who were very much locked in on each other, Urbain had long since covered his mouth with both of his hands and had to physically restrain himself from bursting out laughing.
Wait you mean Urbain actually realized what was happening? I was expecting him to think the opposite being fooled by the fakeness from both of them! Aww... I wanted some giggles... :sadbees:

The nurse really did hate Serena for no reason! What the hell! She started making digs at her from the second she laid eyes on Serena. He’d never seen a Pokemon Center nurse act anything like this before!

“Thank you for noticing,” she brushed her pink bangs out of her face and readjusted her nurse cap. “I actually won Employee of The Year.”

Serena’s eye twitched. “Wow, I can see why! You’re just so great! Can I check out now? Please?” she urged. She wanted to be DONE!!

“Absolutely! Let me gather your items!” She turned around with an empty tray to gather Serena’s purchase.

“Thank you!”

“Oh no,” the nurse started, sounding like she was crooning at a dog, turning back around with a tray full of items and setting it on the counter. “Looks like we are all out of all of our heals except Burn Heals! We also only had 8 potions and 10 Pokeballs in stock! Whoopsie!” She jokingly knocked her fist against her head. “Looks like I must have counted our stock wrong this morning.”

“That’s not very Employee of The Year of you,” Serena snarked. The nurse chose to ignore her and rang up the items.

“You’ll find your total here. Please tap your Rotom Phone to pay.” The woman gestured at the reader. Serena tapped her phone, stuffed her items in her tote bag, and stormed over to where Urbain was standing nearby.

By the look on Urbain’s face and the muffled chuckle he let out, Serena could tell he now fully understood her plight.
Dang! I was looking forward to her trying to explain how her experience was actually bad to an oblivious Urbain! 😫

“Just one sec, I want to see something.” Urbain walked over to the counter.

“Enchantée! Welcome to the Pokemon Center!” the nurse greeted him merrily.

“Thanks! Can I buy one Ice Heal please?” Urbain asked with an easy smile.

“Of course! Just one moment.” She pulled an Ice Heal out from and set it on the counter. “Will that be all? We have many more heals in stock.”

Serena squawked in outrage.

Urbain’s lip twitched, finding it even harder to prevent himself from laughing. “Yeah, that’s it for me, thanks.” He quickly paid, grabbed the Ice Heal, and ran out of the Pokemon Center. Once he was out of earshot, he collapsed laughing, holding the wall to prevent him from falling onto the floor.

Serena joined him, but didn’t look at all amused. “See?!” she huffed. “They hate me!! I did NOTHING to them!!”

Urbain only laughed harder. Serena crossed her arms and tapped her foot as she waited for him to stop laughing.
It IS funny, but WHY do they do it?! Please tell me you will explain at some point later. It would be massively laaaame if you do not! :unquag:

“It’s nice of them to offer a prize. Good motivation to get you catching Pokemon!” Urbain snickered.

“Ha, ha, very funny,” Serena gibed, not at all impressed. “Why don’t you try being on the receiving end of that for five years and then tell me how funny you think it is!!”
This is a delightfully unique angle on the Pokemon Center experience, but I'm going to need to eventually know why.

“No, that would suck immensely,” Urbain admitted playfully. “Now, let’s head to that cemetery."

“Hold on, change of plans, I’ll be reporting to the Lab immediately. One of them is going to port my Dex over. Or so help me…” Serena grumbled, not bothering to finish her threat.

Urbain chuckled. He wished her well in her noble quest to one up the Pokemon Center nurse. He checked his phone, then winced. Yikes. He was about to ruin Serena’s very short lived day even further. “Soooo, “immediately” is gonna be a little hard. We’re gonna have to go tomorrow.”

“No! We are going now!” Serena spat, rounding on him.

Urbain held his hands up in surrender. “Well, the Lab closed about 30 minutes ago.”

“...What?” she said slowly, voice frigid. Serena was at the end of her rope and looked like if you poked her wrong she’d lash out and hit you.

“Hey, don’t shoot the messenger,” Urbain tried to redirect her ire to anything other than himself. “On the bright side though, if we start walking now, we’ll get to the cemetery just after nightfall!” That should cheer her up, right? She seemed really into the cemetery after all.

“I guess that is good.” Fine. Serena would just have to go to the Lab tomorrow and badger them until they agreed to port her Dex. “We’re wasting daylight then complaining about it.”
But Serena, the city is being abused and you want to take a detour to one-up a nurse? :unquag:

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Urbain snorted. She was complaining about it, not “we.” Though he didn’t bother to point that out to her.

During their walk through the city, Serena continued to disdainfully note the ugly scaffolding that now littered the streets.

Urbain was quick to point out relevant landmarks like a helpful tour guide. He tried to stick to things that were new additions or changes in the past few years, but he slipped up a few times and looked rightfully embarrassed like when he tried to explain what Prism Tower was.

Eventually, they passed by a wild zone. Wild zone 3, or as Serena liked to call it, the hellscape that once was the opulently beautiful Rouge Plaza.

“So this is a wild zone.” Serena was disappointed to realize that it was just as ugly as everything else Quasartico produced.

“Wherever you see that green light, it’s marking the boundaries of a wild zone,” Urbain explained as they passed by. “We keep getting more wild Pokemon in Lumiose, so wild zones were Quasartico’s solution to that.”

“They most definitely do NOT have permission from the league to use those specific entry pillars! I did not approve of that! They’re for Gyms only,” Serena fumed. Was everything Quasartico did designed specifically to spit in Serena’s face? “Has anyone asked why we’re getting more wild Pokemon in Lumiose? If there’s enough Pokemon flooding the city to justify full wide range habitats it’s not normal.”
Calling it now, Quasartico is actually ran by a cabal of Pokemon Center Nurses conspiring together! Serena will end up beating Jett but she will just be the figurehead that the nurses selected. She will then think a specific nurse was the real boss only to find out later it was ALL OF THEM! :mewlulz: Then, in order to take down the nurses, she will have to use the rest of her new team to help! The nurses will probably play dirty using Pokemon from other trainers who brought their Pokemon in for healing. One of them will probably have Cynthia's mon and will be the hardest to stop...

“No, I don’t think anyone has, but they should be,” he answered seriously. Urbain typically took people at face value, he really wasn’t the skeptical kind of person, nor did he think he’d ever develop that. Urbain would continue to see the good in people first, but this afternoon with Serena was a bit of a wake up call for him. It was a reminder that just because he saw the good in them, didn’t mean they were good.

Though, Urbain was happy to leave the paranoia and franticness to Serena. That was definitely not the kind of person he was. Can’t be helpful if you’re questioning everybody all the time, right?

“I have to do everything myself, don’t I?” Serena groaned, exasperated by the lack of action of all the authority figures in this damned city.

“Well, not everything. Team MZ’s got your back, okay?” Urbain assured her. “We’ll help out with the investigation and see what we can dig up!”

“I appreciate it, but save that confidence until after you’ve proven you can produce results.” Serena wasn’t going to get her hopes up that she had competent help until the track record showed it.
A wise precaution.

“Ouch, harsh, but fair. Still, you’re giving us a chance.” Urbain’s eyes shined as he looked at her. “We’ll show you that you can rely on us!”

“Don’t let me down then,” Serena gave in, unable to hold strong against his Lillipup eyes.

“We won’t!” Urbain whooped.

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So, this probably would have been a good place for a chapter break. Obviously you would dress it up a bit to make it a chapter end, but you easily could have split it here. So now I'm going to stare at you for a while. 😑 Staaaare!

Serena and Urbain arrived at the cemetery just after nightfall. Serena was immediately accosted by a horrible sight.


‘What… was… that?!?!’ Serena could hardly rationalize what she was seeing.

They turned the cemetery into a FUCKING WILD ZONE?!

No, this time Quasartico went too far! This was so fucked up on SO many levels! Not even because she loved the cemetery, but think of all the graves and people visiting their loved ones?! What then?!

Serena could imagine it clearly: “I’m so sorry sir, we packed way too many Pokemon in the cemetery, and well, a Pyroar dug up your father and chewed on his bones while tearing him apart. It then buried a fresh Pokemon kill in his grave while your father’s desecrated corpse baked in the sunlight. There was nothing we could do.”
Ok yeah! Serena has a point!

Wild Zone 4. They thought they were being so clever with that numbering, huh? In many languages, “4” was the number of death and considered very bad luck. With Quasartico’s less than stellar track record at this point, Serena wouldn’t put it past them that they decided to make the cemetery into a wild zone in the first place just so they could make that joke later.
Yeah, this seems like something the cabal of nurses would come up with. Hmmm... I'm going to need a name to call them. Nursed Grudge. That's what the secret team behind Quasartico will be called. :mewlulz:

Arceus, when she meets that Jett woman, Serena was going to have a LOT to scream at her about!

Urbain didn’t seem to notice her complete mental breakdown. “Sooo, what do you think?”

“I’m not even going to dignify that with a response.” Serena wanted to go bang her head against the bordering wall.

“Ooh… My back…” a woman at the cemetery entrance muttered under her breath. She took notice of the two Trainers. “Oh, pardon me, dearies. Are you going in there?”

Urbain shuddered slightly. “Well, that’s the plan it seems.” He’d do it, but walking through a cemetery at night wasn’t really his idea of a good time to say the least.

“Do you think you could help me out with something?” the elderly lady asked, eyes light with hope. “My name is Moire. I lost my ring here in the cemetery, you see, and it’s very important that I get it back. Ooh… Gosh, my poor back…” She started hunching over, pawing at her back.

Before she collapsed, Serena quickly grabbed the woman, pulling her into a half-hug. “Here, let’s get you settled on this bench.” Serena carefully led the woman to a nearby bench. This woman had been so worried that she ignored her pain and seating areas, continuing to stand by the entrance so she could see inside. Her desperation was palpable.

“Thank you.” Moire leaned back on the bench, but a sharp pain ran through her when her back met the seat back.

“Take your time, madame,” Urbain cautioned her.
NPC side quest #1: Recover the Ring!

Moire eventually found a position that didn’t hurt her, and took a deep breath. “I was visiting a loved one’s grave when a wild Pokemon, of all things, jumped out of nowhere! Ooh, did it ever give me a fright! I took a tumble from the shock, and – my! What a mess it was! Wild Pokemon running all over Lumiose, the cemetery turning into a wild zone… Why, I would never have lost my ring if not for this nonsense!”

Serena nodded her head in solemn agreement. “Moire, I couldn’t agree more with you. This is the first time I’m learning that the cemetery was turned into a wild zone, and it’s utter insanity! This cemetery is special, and people should be able to convene with their loved ones in peace.” Her story was exactly the type of incident that’s doomed to repeat itself with this change.

Moire sighed. “Right you are, dear. It’s nice to see someone your age see the importance of a cemetery. Most of your generation doesn’t seem to respect the dead until after they’ve lost someone.” Moire eyed Serena knowingly. “At any rate, it was a Sableye that jumped out and gave me such an awful fright.”

“A Sableye?! Yes, for sure!!!” Realizing she was being way too excited about this woman’s problems, Serena coughed. “I mean, yes, I’d be happy to help you, madame.”
I always liked Sableye. Cool design and I love how typing prevented it from having any weakness. Too bad their stats and moves suck. I used one in my original play-through of Sapphire GBA. But in a fanfic, Sableye is finally free of such limitations! :eyes:

“I had to leave the cemetery before night fell. They’re so many Ghost Pokemon at night, and I’m no longer a trainer, but I’m too worried about my ring to leave yet. If the Sableye runs off, I’ll never be able to track it down!” Moire fretted. “I dropped my ring around the far end of the cemetery. I’d start searching there, dear.”

“We’ll get your ring back no problem, Moire!” Urbain chirped.

Serena noticed how much the woman was shivering. “Urbain, would you please leave your Tepig with Madame Moire here? Being with a Fire-type should warm her up.”

“Oh, that’s very kind of you, but I’m alright,” Moire politely assured. “You’ll need your Pokemon in the cemetery!”

“No, Serena’s right, I insist!” Urbain sent out his Tepig, who easily agreed to stay with her. He cuddled up next to Moire on the bench.
Not bad for describing an NPC! Feels much less obligatorily side-questy than one might expect.

Serena sent out her Sylveon. “Gattaca, would you please stay with Moire here while we head into the cemetery?" Serena would prefer to leave one of her other Pokemon with Moire, but given this woman’s very fresh bad experience with a Ghost and Dark-type Pokemon, Serena really only had one choice. “I need you to protect her, you’re so big and strong so you’ll easily scare away any Pokemon that might try to approach! You’re the only one I trust with this job.”

“Vee!” Gattaca agreed. Yes, she was very strong and scary. All other Pokemon should tremble at her might!
I can't tell if she is being sarcastic here or not! Gattaca is an extremely high level and is therefor objectively very strong and thus, by extension, scary. Other Pokemon should tremble. :eyes:

But Gattaca doesn't LOOK like that! :unquag:

“Thank you. I’ll be sure to give you another PokePuff if you do a very good job.” Serena knew exactly how to handle her Sylveon. Gattaca had been an Eevee with full dreams of becoming an Umbreon and a matching personality. Even after Gattaca decided to evolve into a Sylveon out of spite, she was still an Umbreon at heart, and very food motivated.
I wonder if Gattaca really did evolve out of spite into Sylveon or if Serena is just improperly labeling her?

“Syl!” Gattaca gracefully jumped up onto the bench and beside Moire.

With Moire settled, the two Trainers entered the cemetery.

A Honedge, who had been drawn to investigate the loud noises on his nightly patrol of the graveyard, discovered a fair lady being accosted by a foul Gastly. Hark! A damsel in distress!

Nay, not a damsel, with how sparkly she was, she must be a princess!

Before he could swoop in and rescue her from the hands of the uncouth Gastly, the princess sent out a mighty Greninja! My, she was a warrior princess! Such daring! Greninja must be the captain of her guard. A true knight! Honedge’s eyes shined admiringly. How marvelous!

The boy accompanying the princess must be her servant. Yes, Honedge affirmed, with how shabby he was dressed, there was nothing else he could be! Honedge had never seen a real princess before. He had to watch her closely!
THE URBAIN WILL NOT BE MOCKED IN THIS WAY!!

Ugh, sorry about the all caps. Urbain has been rather unruly...

Serena returned Sensei to his Pokeball.

“You really aren’t creeped out by this at all?” Urbain asked, struggling to not look back over his shoulder every time he felt a chill – which was all the time.

“Nope!” Serena took a few big steps in front and twirled on one foot. “This is wonderful! Dormez Bien Cemetery was the number one thing I missed about Lumiose!”

“Seriously?” He thought she looked beautiful in the moonlight,
She looks beautiful in all light, if you are being honest, Urbain.

but the whole mood was kinda massively ruined by the “we’re actively being hunted by ghosts” thing. Urbain was more focused on trying to ignore everything around him right now. “Out of everything Lumiose has to offer, you missed this the most?”

“Absolutely! The atmosphere, the cold, the Pokemon, the architecture, the gravestones, the rousing ethical dilemmas, and contemplating the nature of life and death! It’s the best! The mausoleum really pushes it over the top.” Serena chorused. “This is the best graveyard in all of Kalos! I have a tier list.”
She's a hex maniac who dresses and acts like a spunky fairy.

Urbain snorted. Serena was kind of a dork about this, it was adorable. “What’s the lowest on the tier list?”

“Geosenge Town!” she spat. Lysandre was buried under rubble there. She’d never step foot in that town ever again.

“I guess there’s not much left of it after whatever happened there five years ago.” Urbain grimaced. Most of the story was shrouded in mystery. Everyone knew Team Flare was responsible for the fate of Geosenge Town, but no one really knew exactly what happened or why. It was also public knowledge that Serena had been the one who finally put an end to Team Flare.

Urbain had questions about all of it. It would be nice to finally get the actual story, but he wouldn’t ask them now. Especially not after he saw how tense Serena got after his last comment.
Urbain is randomly observant at times.

Something blew sharp cold air on Urbain’s neck. His skin crawled and he shot up into the air, before he stumbled, tripping over his own feet, and fell on the ground. He hastily looked around, heart pounding out of his chest, trying to find the culprit, but none could be found. “Something just attacked me!”

“Good one, Gastly!” Serena laughed. Urbain snapped his head towards her. WHAT?! “I think he jumped at least two feet in the air! Wow!”

Bodiless cackles drifted around him, before a trio of Gastly finally became tangible. “Gasssss!”

“Oh, there’s three of you! Very well done working in a team!” Serena praised. The Gastly now looked a little bashful. “Which one of you is the lookout?”

“Gas!!” the right most Gastly, who had slightly more droopy eyes than the other two, piped up.

She smiled at him and pet the top of his head. “You did a wonderful job! I didn’t even notice you at all! You should be very proud.” Serena took three Oran Berries out of her bag. “Here, one for each of you! Keep up the good scare work, and you’ll become Haunters in no time!”
I love how nonchalant she is about it... However, considering this is a cemetery where people go to honor the dead, is it really a good idea to encourage the Gastly to prank people around here? I could imagine an old person getting so scared from them that it triggers a heart attack and causes them to literally die... :copyka:

Also, isn't that the exact kind of situation that caused her to go on her side quest to begin with? :copyka:

“Gastly! Gas!” The three gleefully ate their berries, and drifted off, inspired to go cause more problems.

Honedge watched admiringly from a distance. What a wonderful kind princess acknowledging her subjects' efforts and taking time to speak to the people!
This Honedge is going to join her team for sure. :eyes:

Urbain stood up and did a full body shake, trying to get the feeling off of him. “You have a way with ghosts. I see that now.” He didn’t have anything against Ghost Pokemon, but this whole excursion was a little much for him.

Serena rolled her eyes and grabbed his hand. “If you’re going to be a little scaredy Meowth, I’ll hold your hand to reassure you.”

Okay, scratch that. Yeah, Urbain would sign up for another midnight graveyard stroll if it meant this happening again.
WOAH! Urbain is now having the NEW best day of his life! :wowzard:

Urbain cursed that time flew by so quickly, and before he knew it, they were at the back of the cemetery, a Sableye in their sights. Serena tugged him behind a tree with her before the Sableye could spot them. She let go of his hand. Darn.
Don't worry, Urbain! If it happened once, it can happen again! :letsgorb:

Serena stuck her head around the corner, and observed the Sableye. Sableye sat against the base of a tree, kicking his legs up and down, holding his hand out in front of him and admiring the ring on his finger. It had to be Moire’s. He also wore a few necklaces and bracelets of various colors and designs. However, Serena approvingly noted that they were all very tasteful pieces that worked well together. Serena gestured for Urbain to stay where he was.
Serena. Sableye clearly stole all of those. The fashion is quite besides the point! Why are you APPROVING?! :unquag:

Oh no! Honedge fretted, realizing what she was about to do. The princess was heading right for Sableye, the scourge of the graveyard! Honedge was ready to protect her at the first sign of trouble! It would no doubt be a lofty battle, Sableye was a most formidable opponent, but Honedge was sure he’d emerge victorious! Honor demanded it!
Honedge reminds me of my MC :mewlulz:

“Wow!” Serena exclaimed as she approached. Sableye jolted and scrambled to get ready to attack. “That’s such a beautiful ring you have there! It really matches your eyes and brings out the blue in them.”

Oh, so she had taste. Sableye relaxed. “Sable, eye!” Yes, thank you for noticing. He flipped his hand around to show off the ring to her, cocking his wrist downwards.

Serena approached and dropped down to her knees beside him. “May I?”

“Say.” Sableye flicked his wrist slightly in an approving gesture. Serena lightly took hold of Sableye’s hand.

“Gosh, it’s even more radiant up close!” She brought his hand up to be parallel with his eyes. “You really did find a fantastically colored stone, and the setting is very elegant. The square cut really complements your eye shape.” Serena wasn’t acting or exaggerating to butter up this Sableye. She really did appreciate this little fashionista and his picks. They were going to get along fabulously!
I was wondering if she was buttering Sableye up, so I appreciate this last line.

“Say, say.” Sableye waved his other hand in a bashful dismissive way, though he was very much preening and wanted her to continue.

Serena released his hand. “I’m Serena, it’s nice to meet you!” She extended her hand. Sableye primly shook her hand.

“Sableye,” he returned the introduction.

“It’s wonderful to meet a Pokemon with good fashion taste! Honestly, I don’t understand why most couldn’t care less!” Serena huffed. “Appearances matter, you know!” None of the Pokemon on her team really appreciated fashion. They’d let her dress them up once and a while, or put a single small accessory on them, but it was always because she wanted to. They didn’t really care.

Serena needed this Sableye on her team! He would love going shopping with her and have loads of opinions on her outfits!

“Sable,” Sableye agreed, bobbing his head as he judgingly recalled his fellow Pokemon and their criminal lack of style.

From his hiding spot behind the tree, Urbain smacked his forehead with his hand. Of course Serena would bond over being fancy with a goblin.
Wow, it seems like Serena catches mon by befriending them instead of battling them. Actually, I think I prefer it like that in a fic setting like this!

Urbain had been very interested in watching a Champion’s Pokemon catching methods. He was both impressed and let down. Serena knew exactly how to approach that Pokemon and talked with him like they were old friends. Sableye, who was a criminal and prone to attack people, was completely at ease with her. It was stupidly incredible.

But on the other hand, there wasn’t really a replicable method here because of how hyper-specific her angle was and the fact that she really did have an affinity for Ghost and Dark-types. Their personalities just clicked in a very weird whackadoodle way.
An apt description!

“Actually, I just noticed something.” Serena grinned excitedly as she shifted to fully sitting on the ground. “We almost have the same color eyes!”

Sableye examined her eyes, and realized she was right. “Eye.” He eagerly raised his hand up to put the ring next to her eyes. He brought his other hand to his chin as he contemplated whether or not it would match her too. “Sable,” he declared resolutely, pulling back his hand. It also matched her very well.

“You just have to tell me where you found that ring!” Serena insisted. “I think I might have to get one myself.”

Sableye hesitated. He didn’t want to admit to his new friend that he stole it.

“You didn’t find that ring, did you?” Serena said softly.

“Able,” he confessed. “Sableye, say, say!” he regaled trying to shift the focus onto how epic of a heist it was. He launched into a long, full recounting of the story, using hand gestures and elaborate intonation to act out exactly what happened. “Sableye!”

“No way! Really?” Serena marveled. “You did all that?” Bless his little heart, he was theatrical too! Ah, they were meant to be!
This whole bit is making me smile. Its absurd, but it works so well!

“Say!” Sableye confirmed, positively gleeful Serena appreciated his work. Humans normally didn’t react well to stealing. Most humans were stupid though. And unfashionable. Luckily, his new friend was neither!

“That’s pretty impressive. But I think I can top your heist story,” Serena challenged with a smirk.

‘Um, WHAT?!’ Urbain could barely believe what he was seeing. Serena, the morally upstanding Champion of Kalos, was exchanging crime stories with a wild Pokemon thief?!

…Serena did crime?!

“Sableye,” Sableye commented belittlingly, crossing his arms and doubting she could do better. He welcomed her to try.

Serena stood with a flourish and took a few steps back. She turned her back to Sableye. Serena whipped back around to face him, her skirt flaring. Her palms and fingers were spread wide in front of her head. She slowly drew her hands away to the sides, revealing her face.

“After several days of searching, I had finally discovered the entrance to my mark’s top secret headquarters. It was hidden in an unassuming cafe behind a bookcase that required a secret password to open.” Serena set the stage and tipped the brim of her hat downwards to obscure her eyes. “Naturally, they were helpless when faced with my very advanced interrogation tactics. I easily got the minions to disclose the password to me, then knocked them out. The base wasn’t alerted to my arrival.” Serena raised her chin and suddenly pointed at Sableye. “I was in.”

Sableye gasped and sat down. He folded his legs up to his chest, wrapping his arms around them, and leaned forward. He was enraptured. Sableye’s mouth remained open slightly like he’d forgotten to close it all the way after reacting.
It just gets funnier as it goes! :mewlulz:

But it also does a good job at calling back to things she did in the past. :eyes:

“This organization’s headquarters was an unimaginable labyrinth designed specifically to keep intruders out. But that didn’t stop me.” Serena smirked and flipped her hair over her shoulder, looking very smug. “I crawled through the depths of their lair, teleporting every which way to navigate the maze, while sneakily using high-grade stealth tactics to avoid being spotted by the organization's roaming grunts or dealing with them ruthlessly when it couldn’t be helped.”

Serena continued to act alongside her narration and made sure to intone her voice just right as she delivered every line for maximum impact. If she was going to tell this story, she was going to do it right!

“Say…” Sableye unknowingly murmured under his breath, completely sucked into her story.

“After hours of subtle but epic infiltration, I finally found what I’d come to steal in the first place!” she announced.

“Sable!” What was it? Jewels, gold… super exclusive high-end fashion?! Sableye had to know!

“The elevator key card,” Serena declared, casting her arms out to the side and tilting her chin up.

“...Say?” Sableye tilted his head, confused. Huh?

“Oh, but this was no ordinary elevator key card, Sableye, oh, no,” Serena elaborated, drawing Sableye back in. “With it, I was able to descend into the ultra secret depths of their base and gain entry to their most closely guarded places. Which was where my true target lied. That’s right, the key card heist was only a part of my greater master plan: to save the world from this organization's nefarious plot and rescue the king imprisoned in their underground dungeons!” Serena revealed hauntingly.

“Ey!” Sableye yelped at the unexpected twist, bringing a hand up to cover his mouth. He was on the edge of his seat!
I love how you just go all in on this sparing no detail. :mewlulz: When you commit to writing something, you really commit!

“This organization was evil,” Serena made sure to stress with great emphasis, glaring down at Sableye, “with a goal so terrible I won’t dare repeat it. I quickly freed the trapped king, but I couldn’t linger. Time was ticking! I went even further down into the bowels of their lair, and faced their boss directly. The battle that followed was brutal. He was no easy foe. But with the aid of my absolutely incredible Pokemon, we were able to win and stop his plans! The world was safe at last, and everyone celebrated my triumph with a glorious parade!” Serena finished, and gave a bow.

Sableye sprung to his feet and clapped frantically. “Say, Sableye!” he cheered. Not only did Serena have an amazing true heist story, but she appreciated proper storytelling!

‘Oh,’ Urbain realized. ‘She was telling part of the Team Flare takedown story.’ Urbain was sure that there were exaggerations, it was Serena after all, not to mention she probably left a lot of things out, but it was still incredibly enlightening. It wasn’t the whole story, there was a lot he still didn’t understand, but he had an inkling of an idea now.

Shit. The Team Flare situation and what happened five years ago was way worse than everyone assumed it was. They only knew the very tip of the iceberg. No wonder Serena was as paranoid as she was now.
That's cool how it doubles to help clue Urbain in some. Nicely done!

“Thank you, thank you.” Serena continued to bow and curtsy.

Honedge, who had been listening intently from his hiding spot, was entranced. She was not a princess, nay, she was a queen anointed by her people! A queen who slayed evil!
I love how her standing keeps increasing the longer Honedge watches! :mewlulz:

“Sableye,” he conceded honestly, shaking his head in defeat. Serena had the better story by far.

Serena crossed her arms and nodded approvingly. “You have the grace to admit when you’re beat, Sableye. That’s very elegant.”

Sableye still had a lot to learn it seemed. He paused. Maybe he could learn it from her…? Yes! He could learn it from her! Sableye waddled up to Serena and gently tugged on her skirt. “Sable, say!” He made a circle with his hands, a throwing motion, and then pointed to himself.

Serena’s smile was radiant. “Of course you can come with me!! I was just about to ask you, actually! You’re absolutely magnificent!”

Sableye grinned toothily, showcasing his sharp teeth. He jumped, scrambling up her side, being very careful to not nick her clothing, and perched on her shoulder. Sableye nuzzled into her cheek with the side of his face. “Sable, eye!”

“Ah!” Serena exclaimed, unable to contain her excitement, nuzzling him back. “What do you think of the nickname Grimlin? It’s a combination of “grim” and “gremlin.” I think that fits you rather perfectly for such a sneaky Sableye as yourself.”

Sableye considered the name before nodding in agreement. “Eye!” He liked how it also sounded like it could be an old-money fancy elitist name.
Nice idea for a name. I'm a fan of coming up with cool nicknames too. Explaining the thought behind it is also nice to see.

She took out an empty Luxury Ball. She knew Sableye wanted to look the best he could, so she’d give him the flashiest Pokeball out there! Serena was getting a little ahead of herself though.

“Before we make this official, I do have to talk to you about one thing,” Serena sighed. She picked him up off her shoulder and placed him in front of her. She kneeled down to face him. “You left one thing out of your ring heist story earlier. I know because I just met the woman outside the cemetery. The person you stole it from ended up getting really hurt.”

“Sable?” Did she really? Oops. That hadn’t been the plan.

“You, mister, still have to apologize to the woman you scared. Scaring people is totally fine,” Serena relented, Urbain made a squawk of disagreement in the background, “but you can’t go around hurting frail old ladies. She got injured pretty badly.”

“Eye.” Grimlin looked down at his feet. It was only supposed to be an epic jewel heist! That’s all! He hadn’t meant to hurt her. “Sable.” He looked back up at Serena and nodded. He’d apologize.
Good that she addresses this prior to capture. Gives Sableye a chance to set things right on his own accord rather than by compulsion.

“Good!” Serena praised. “And you need to give the ring back to her.”

“SABLE!” Grimlin protested furiously! No! This was HIS ring now! “Sableye!!” She didn’t have any problem with his grab before!

“The ring you stole was very sentimentally important to her,” Serena explained. “I also know how much you love that ring, and I agree, it does look fabulous on you. So how about a trade instead?” Serena reached around her neck and unclasped a very thin chain she had tucked under her shirt. On the chain was a stunning wedding ring that did look strikingly similar to the one on Sableye’s finger. “This ring was my grandmother’s wedding ring, it’s all I have left of her. I’ve worn it on this chain for years so I could keep her close to my heart.”

“Sableye!” Sableye tried to reject, pushing back on her hands. That was much too important to her!

“I want you to have it. She was just as kooky and glitzy as you are. Hell, I don’t at all put it past her to have come back from the dead as a Ghost Pokemon and is living it up scaring the crap out of people in a cemetery somewhere and stealing their jewels too.” Serena playfully rubbed his head. “She would have loved you. Just wear it proudly and keep it safe for me, okay? Guard your treasure trove better than a dragon!”
Well, this certainly slates Sableye to be a valued member of her team.

Urbain’s eyes watered at the touching moment. Serena was really something else. He couldn’t believe she was willing to give up such a prized possession to help a stranger in need. Urbain wondered if he’d be willing to do the same with his mother’s jacket. He didn’t know.

“Eye!” he agreed, determined. Grimlin would wear it grandly and treat it extra special! The more Sableye stared at it, he realized it was prettier than his current ring with a slightly bigger gem size.

He was upgrading, baby!
Huh... Sableye was trying to reject it earlier. The switch to being excited about it feels slightly too easy/fast here.

Sableye slipped the stolen ring off his finger and exchanged it with Serena’s ring. He looked at it reverently. Dopamine bubbled up inside him until he was gushing and cooing over it. What was happening again? OH YEAH! Ball please!!

Sableye surged forward and tapped his head on the Luxury Ball Serena still had out, catching himself. Serena chuckled, and immediately sent him out. Sableye continued to admire his new ring.

Honedge was moved to tears! The queen heroically rescued the ring from the dastardly Sableye to return it to a woman in need, an act of true nobility! She even willingly sacrificed her ancestral ring to make it happen! Her readiness to combat foes for the sake of the peasants was truly the mark of a worthy and excellent leader. Honedge would gladly pledge loyalty and swear the knight's oath to her. But first, she must face him in a duel!

“Honedge!” he finally revealed himself. He floated over to Serena. He bowed to her, dipping and folding his arm-like tassel across his front. He used his scabbard that was gripped in his tassel to raise Serena’s hand up to his body and kissed it. “Ho, ho, hone! Edge!” Honedge gallantly challenged her.
Ah, so we ARE going to get a battle! :eyes:

Urbain, who figured it was all clear to come out at this point, chuckled. “I think he saw everything and wants to join you too. Your dramatic powers were too much for him!” Now more than ever, the “Serena is a Ghost and Dark-type Trainer” thing was clicking for him. They were all dramatic little instigators who loved having fun at other people’s expenses.
Yeah, makes sense!

Serena couldn’t believe her luck! A Honedge who acted like a LITTLE KNIGHT?! YES!! ABSOLUTELY YES! The Honedge whipped his scabbard around, indicating that it wanted to battle. Of course he would! He was very chivalrous after all. Oh she had the most perfect name picked out for him already!

Serena looked down to Grimlin who wasn’t at all paying attention and very wrapped up in his new ring. “Grimlin, want to battle?”

“Hone!” Honedge shook his body from side to side, rejecting that. Nay! He had no desire to face such a dubiously moral and dishonorable foe. He wanted to face the true knight! The captain of the queen’s guard, Greninja! If Honedge was to earn his rank amongst the knights, he must challenge the captain himself. Sableye was clearly the court jester. “Edge! Edge!” He tried his best to indicate just who he wanted to face.
Oh! What a bold thing to do! I'm looking forward to the battle even if it ends in a single hit! :veelove:

Grimlin tilted his head to the side. Serena had a Greninja? Awesome! He must be super sneaky! He’d definitely help Sableye improve his slight of hand. Grimlin now also wanted to see the Greninja. Grimlin took one of his fingers and drew a sketch of Greninja in the dirt. “Sable!” He pointed down at his drawing.

Serena blinked. “You are surprisingly a great artist. Huh.” She made a mental note to get him a sketchbook.
Wow! So many little details that go into the personality and quirks of her team! :eyes:

“I see now, thank you, Grimlin. Honedge, you want to fight Sensei, my Greninja? You must have seen him earlier.”

“Hone!” Honedge confirmed. Sableye played his part perfectly as the court entertainer by illustrating Honedge’s requests! What fun! The hobgoblin would indubitably provide much merriment at a feast. Marvelous!
You really seem to get the most out of this 3rd person omniscient style! I'm a bit envious of it, actually. The ability to explore the thoughts and desires of not only a single character, but potentially all of them! It gives more depth and personality to your characters.

Serena sent Sensei out. “Sensei, Honedge saw you defeat that Gastly earlier and wants to challenge you specifically to earn his spot on the team.”

The Greninja stared at Honedge curiously. Something touched his leg. Sensei looked down to see a medium-small sized Sableye covered in elaborate jewelry hugging his leg tightly, peering up at Sensei with sparkling glistening eyes like Greninja was the greatest thing since sliced bread. Or rocks, in Sableye’s case.

Sensei looked back at Serena, who was unhelpfully recording this on her Rotom Phone. “Nin!”

“That’s Grimlin,” Serena snickered. “He’s our new team member.”

Sensei turned back to Grimlin, a bit overwhelmed. It looked like there was an actual cloud of glitter around Grimlin. Should he shake him off?

Wait. Wait a second.

The Sableye admired him. The Sableye ADMIRED HIM! He whipped his head to the Honedge, who looked equally as entranced by him.

Oh. OH!
Sensei is about to be in his element. :mewlulz:

These were to be his disciples. Sensei croaked, immensely pleased. Yes, they should look up to him. Sensei would show them how he was the gold standard of what a Pokemon should be and humbly accept them under his tutelage when they came begging for his wisdom. He was very wise.

“Sensei.” Serena caught his attention. “You handle this however you’d like.” She knew it was ending with Honedge on the team. She’d just step back and record this to show the rest of her Pokemon later.

That was all the go ahead Sensei needed!

Impassioned, Sensei approached Honedge, stiffly limping as the Sableye continued to cling to his leg. “Nin, ninja,” he addressed Grimlin, promising he’d spend much time with him later.

“Sable!!!” If it was possible, Grimlin sparkled even more. He finally detached himself from Sensei’s leg, and plopped down next to Serena. Seeing a new person, Grimlin waved at him, and then made sure to show off his new ring to the man. Urbain laughed jovially.

“Gre, greninja,” Sensei accepted Honedge's challenge with a fluid nod and a practiced pose.
I love how you have the Pokemon talk with their names as they do in the anime. I'm not sure if they did this with the games in some of the later ones, but it's enjoyable and your 3rd person omniscient style prevents confusion or ambiguity!

“Hone!” Honedge prepared himself. He knew there was no way he’d win, but this wasn’t about winning. It was proving his potential as a knight and showing that he was worthy of training! "Honedge!" En garde!

Sensei formed a single Water Shuriken and fired it off much slower than usual. Honedge darted out of the way, proving to be surprisingly nimble for his species. Honege had a trick up his sleeve! Something Greninja would never expect!

Honedge quickly used Screech, which Greninja allowed to land. Ha ha! That’s what he’d been hoping for. He was being underestimated, which was all he needed! Honedge dodged another Water Shuriken by navigating around a tree. The shuriken made a thunk as it hit the tree trunk.

In the brief moment he was obscured, Honedge quickly used Shadow Sneak, then emerged. Greninja’s eyes tracked Honedge, not noticing the Shadow Sneak. The move made contact! He did it!

Honedge stopped moving, and bowed to Greninja. “Honedge.” Honedge knew when to throw in the towel. He’d done what he’d set out to accomplish – prove he had potential to this wizened master. If Greninja chose to fell him, so be it!

“Greninja,” Sensei nodded approvingly. He had been briefly caught off guard by the Honedge. He showed great promise. “Gre, re.”

Honedge lit up! Greninja was accepting him as his student! How stupendous!
Yeah, a battle doesn't have to be all drawn out to serve its function. It's cool that you understand this.

Sensei inclined his head to his Trainer, beckoning her to catch the Pokemon. Serena scavenged around in her bag. She knew she had a Heavy Ball here somewhere… Oh there it was! She took it out. Honedge bowed before her like he was being knighted. Well, she couldn’t not give him what he wanted.

Serena cleared her throat. “Hear ye, hear ye! Today we have a new knight joining our ranks!” Honedge could practically melt from how happy he was! This was it! “Honedge, please approach and kneel.” Honedge floated closer, keeping his gaze downwards. “You have proven yourself to be worthy of the rank of knight. Do you vow to uphold the knight's oath?”

“Honedge,” he said resolutely.

“Then by the power invested in me as the Champion of Kalos,” which was actually a real thing, so this technically was a real knighthood, “I dub thee Engarde, and bestow upon you the rank of knight.” Serena tapped the bottom of the Heavy Ball on either side of Honedge in place of a sword. “You may rise, Sir Engarde.”

Sensei, Urbain, and Grimlin all clapped and cheered in congratulations.

Engarde straightened with sharp determination, eyes alight. He’d done it. He was a true knight now!

“When you’re ready,” Serena told him, gesturing to the Heavy Ball. Engarde reached out and pressed the button on the ball.

Ding!
Ok, that was massively cool in both execution and how it was tailored to Honedge. Serena really knows how to read mon and appeal to them.

Sensei nodded his head at Grimlin who looked stupidly thrilled at the acknowledgement. Serena returned Sensei to his ball. She kept Grimlin out for now, he still had to apologize after all.

Urbain nudged Serena with his elbow. “All three of you guys match perfectly,” he snickered, joking. That Honedge was a riot!

“Thank you!! Ah, I’m so glad you think so!” She beamed, taking it as a serious complement. They were precious!!

A chivalrous little knight and a fancy kleptomaniac chaos goblin.
Great descriptors, especially the second! :mewlulz:

Nice how she can catch more than one mon in the same scene. No need to drag them out too far. Great way of packing them in neatly together!

Serena already loved them SO much!!

“Well, let’s get going and return this ring to Moire!” Urbain started walking off a pep in his step. Seeing how silly Ghost Pokemon could be made them a little less intimidating.

“Let’s go, Grimlin!” Serena hummed.

“Sable!” Grimlin followed after her.

Serena had only literally taken one step before a shiny Ekans popped its head out of a hole in the ground almost under her feet in a flurry of sparkles. On instinct, Serena threw a Pokeball at it. The ball bopped the Ekans on its green head, pulling it inside the ball.

Capture success!
That was so random!!! :wowzard:

Wow. You did a great job at getting a surprise factor in there!

Serena stared at the Pokeball in her hand. She saw a shiny and just reacted! Ugh, why did she catch it? Sparkles. Pretty sparkles. Curse her reaction to sparkles! Serena had no interest in raising this Ekans!!

Serena would give it to Urbain as a gift. He’d absolutely be the type to lose it over a shiny Pokemon. She jogged up to meet Urbain.

“Urbain! I just caught this, and thought of you. I want you to have it.” Serena placed a Pokeball in his hands.

“Oh, why?” Urbain really hoped it wasn’t a Ghost-type. Tonight had proven that he wasn’t cut out for training them.

Serena giggled and looked him in the eyes. “Because it's shiny, and you’re also 1 in 8,192.”

Let it be known that was the cheesiest line Urbain had ever heard and he’d be damned if he didn’t admit that it worked on him, big time. Maybe it was just because Serena was the one saying it, but it hit him like an arrow through the heart.
Honestly, Serena doesn't even have to try. Urbain would take litterally anything she gave him. He would treasure a regular Tentacool too, I'm convinced!

She uses it to offload a mon she doesn't want and Urbain will appreciate it regardless. Alright then. 😮

Serena continued, “So I figured you’d be perfect for each other.” Urbain’s heart fluttered. “And because you would be the type who’d discover a new Pokemon and just name it “snake” backwards.” Serena didn’t even hesitate, nor did she change her tone, or even laugh. She just casually started rummaging around in her bag. “What am I gonna do with an Ekans, anyways?” she mumbled.

The sheer absentmindedness of it all was enough for Urbain to realize she hadn’t been flirting with him. She had been making fun of him.

The wind rushed out of Urbain’s sails and the butterflies in his stomach crashed into the ground. ‘Yeah,’ Urbain moped, ‘getting that kind of compliment was too good to be true.’ He looked down at his new shiny Ekans’ Pokeball in dismay. ‘Guess you and me bud are in the same boat here.’

The “dismissed by Serena” boat, that is.
What? He was given a gift by Serena and he accepts it with disdain??

Her holding his hand earlier was more like an eye-roll gesture from her. We didn't see Urbain complaining then! It was like Serena didn't really find enjoyment in holding his hand and just did it to help him get over his 'ridiculous' fear. It was something Urbain could have considered degrading of his manhood since it was like treating him like a scared little kid, but he gleefully accepted it anyway because he got to hold her hand. Yet here, when Serena gives him a SHINEY mon as a gift, he has the opposite reaction? It seems like inconsistent characterization.

I don't like it.

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Yet another stylish scene break! :cool:

Exiting the cemetery, Moire perked up upon seeing them. “Oh, there you two are. I was getting worried! Sylveon and Tepig were excellent company.” She absentmindedly pet Sylveon’s head, who leaned into her hand and nuzzled it. Gattaca liked this old lady. She gave her secret snacks!!

Serena cheered silently in her head that Gattaca hadn’t been a problem!

Serena kneeled down next to Moire and carefully presented the ring to her. “Madame, here is your ring back. I hope this brings you some peace of mind.”

Moire’s eyes watered. “Oh! That’s it – that’s my ring! Thank you, dearies. You’ve done a very kind thing.”

“We’d never let you stay out here in the cold all night worrying!” Urbain shook his head, and gave her a soft smile.

“Moire, someone has something to say to you.” Serena beckoned over the Sableye, who had ducked behind a pillar by the entrance of the cemetery as soon as Moire had first spoken earlier, too embarrassed to come closer. Grimlin reluctantly emerged from his hiding spot, and waddled over.

“Say, Sableye,” Grimlin apologized awkwardly, twirling his thumbs together. He reached out and patted her leg a few times. “Sable.”

“Well, aren’t you a very polite young man?” Moire chuckled. “Apology accepted.”

“Grimlin was wearing your ring around when I found him. He only stole it because he thought it was gorgeous,” Serena reported.

“What?” Moire’s eyes widened in surprise, flattered. “I didn’t think a wild Pokemon would have such good taste in jewelry."

Grimlin suddenly perked up and puffed out his chest. “Say, say!” He reached out his hand to show off the new ring he had to Moire.

“Oh, you most certainly have very good taste, Sableye,” she admired. “But now that I have it back, I won’t let go of this ring again anytime soon. It’s the wedding ring my wonderful husband gave me, after all. I was visiting him when you scared me.”

Grimlin looked distraught. “Sableye,” he apologized again, this time more firmly.

Moire regarded the Sableye with a smile. “Thank you, Sableye. You know, perhaps I’ll ask someone to place this ring atop my grave after I’ve passed on. Who knows? Maybe you will make off with it again. If so, I hope it brings brings you some happiness then. It’s the least I could do to reward your good taste.”

Grimlin’s ears perked up and his eyes shined at the idea. “Eye!” He nodded frantically in agreement to show his approval.

Moire turned to Serena and Urbain. “Thank you both too, dearies. Truly. And please, take this for your troubles.”
Sidequest complete! I enjoy how you used it to net some new mon for them and you did well with the descriptions and interactions. It was a nice thing to help Moire. I don't expect to see her again in the fic after this chapter though as I expect her purpose was to be a side-quest. But who knows? Maybe you plan to bring her back for more things later? I wouldn't totally put it past you.

Serena pushed Moire’s outstretched hand holding a few items back, rejecting the offer. “Madame, I want to apologize sincerely for everything that happened to you tonight.” Serena bowed her head, voice wavering. This was the first story she’d heard since arriving here of Quasartico’s direct effect on the people, and it wasn’t good. Someone was seriously hurt and almost lost such an irreplaceable keep sake. This was on Serena’s shoulders.

“Dear,” Moire spoke, confused. “Why are you apologizing? None of this is your fault. You’re my hero.”

Those words mocked Serena, and the pit in her stomach grew.

“No.” Serena insisted, meeting Moire’s eyes. “This is my fault. Regardless of if you recognized me or not, let me introduce myself.” She took off her glasses. “I’m Serena, Champion of Kalos. This, what happened to you, what happened to this city, it’s all my fault because I didn’t do better. Because I was negligent. If I had been here, if I had cared more, none of this would have happened, and you would be able to visit your husband undisturbed. It was my job to ensure all of this insanity wouldn’t happen. I failed you, I failed Lumiose.”
Ooo! This should be interesting to see the reaction of Moire and Urbain to this! :eyes:

Urbain clenched his fist by his side. Urbain had just figured she was just the “I work alone” type, not that Serena was carrying so much guilt. Serena was wrong. None of this was her fault! Every citizen of Lumiose had a responsibility to the city too. They had all allowed this to happen, and it was up to everyone to fix it! Serena absolutely had a stake in the region’s affairs, but it wasn’t her job to ensure every little thing in Kalos was perfect! No one should ever expect that of the Champion. Serena was human, she was allowed to make mistakes, and she didn’t deserve to have this unreasonable overbearing guilt weighing her down!

Moire’s eyes softened, and she reached out to rub Serena’s back. “I have lived a long time in Lumiose. I remember back when we were newlyweds, my husband stormed into our house one day and couldn’t stop complaining about how Pokemon Centers' new healing machines were going to destroy the potion market.” She laughed, fondly recalling the memory. “This city is always evolving. Change and discourse are a part of life, it’s what keeps things interesting and on our toes. Could you imagine how boring life would be if everything was stagnant?”

Moire couldn’t have known just how much saying that affected Serena. If Serena’s vision of Kalos remained exactly the same as before she left, Kalos would have been exactly like Lysandre’s little utopia, wouldn’t it? Forever frozen and eternally beautiful.
Oh! That's an interesting way to look at it! :eyes:

No, Moire was right, the fact that Kalos had changed was a good thing.
Was it, though? What you want is good change not BAD change!

Serena still shouldered that it hadn’t all been a good change and Quasartico was still a massive red flag problem, but Serena now accepted that even if she had been present as Champion, something would have found a way to have gone wrong.
Ok, sure, but I think the main point is that if she had been present, the whole Quasartico fiasco would be no where NEAR as bad is it currently is. She had the power to prevent much of that if she had been present. I could see this line of thinking taking some of the edge off, but not taking away the guilt entirely.

Serena had to let go of the idea that she could have controlled it. She maybe could have guided it, but she couldn’t have stopped it. Change was fluid and rippled like the waves created by dropping a stone in a pond. Serena had dropped many stones into the pond five years ago and was still seeing the effects.
Sounds like she is now thinking that past success gives her a free pass at ignoring the responsibility that comes with her current power and status.

The bottom line here is that things would currently be much better if she had been there and took responsibility, but she would have needed more mental strength than she had in order to do all that. She needed a long break.

Staying and preventing bad things would have worn her down and completely broke her spirit after all the stuff she went through leading up to it. She would become a shell of the person she currently was, like I think AZ was at one point.(I'm surprised you didn't want to use an angle like this given how it should be an easy example for your readers to relate to.) If that happened, things would eventually become even worse than they were here. She may be Champion, but she is still a person and was only 13 when all that stuff went down. That's a lot to put on her shoulders even if she was capable. Too much, honestly, and extremely unfair to her. I think her mental load and age would be much more powerful angles to use here.

No, it's not ok that she wasn't there, but at the same time, she couldn't mentally handle it and trying to do it anyway would have broken her. The fact that she got away and rested is the reason she is able to be there helping now. Ultimately, I think she will do more good due to the way things played out than if she had stayed. She can't help others if she breaks herself.

“Please don’t blame yourself for being unable to stop the natural progression of time,” Moire continued. “Things might not be perfect now, but sometimes we need to make mistakes before we see the path forward. And if nothing improves? Well, we Kalosians will do what we do best and bring out the barricades and guillotines.” Moire’s eyes were alight, and her smile vicious. “We are a people who demand change when faced with injustice and fix things with our own hands, after all.” She patted Serena’s back once more before pulling her hand back. “You of all people, Serena, should know that.”
She assumes that Quasartico won't have the power to stop and control them all. Try telling people in China to rise up against their injustice and see how well that works for them... Oh wait, they've tried before and were beaten down into submission and it's been that way for decades with no sign of things ever turning around. The will of a population can be manipulated and beaten down to the point where resistance is unfeasible. Places like North Korea control their population so hard that they aren't even allowed to move to another country to escape.

Quasartico isn't far enough along yet to be at that point yet, but once they do it will be too late. Only someone like Serena could stop them beyond a certain point, but even she can't be everywhere and still needs to sleep.

Moire hadn’t recognized her at first, but she knew exactly who Serena was and what she did for Kalos five years ago. Serena hadn’t been Champion then but still acted. She’d been an ordinary girl who couldn’t sit by and watch her beloved region fall into chaos. Serena raised her flag and cut the rot off at its head.

Serena was an exemplary Kalosian.
So Moire is going to think all these nice things that might help Serena feel better, but not actually say them? Ok then... :copyka:

Urbain could have done without Moire’s morbidly intense ending, seriously, cemetery lovers really were a different breed, but he strongly agreed with her. “It’s like I said before, Serena, it's all of Lumiose’s fight, not just yours,” he reiterated firmly.
It's true that it's a big place and other people aren't powerless in general even if they aren't the Champion.

Serena very carefully hugged the woman, cautious of her injury. “Thank you,” she murmured in her ear. Serena pulled back. “You wear your age well, Moire. Your style shines through more than just your clothes.”

“Well, I should certainly hope my clothes are shining too!” Moire huffed. “This coat is vintage Boutique Couture after all!”

Serena’s eyes sparkled as she giggled. “Oh, don’t think I didn’t notice! It’s practically glowing!”

Yes, Serena loved cemeteries. Nothing else could really compare.
Ok and this last bit ends on a fair note.


End Notes
Nickname central:
Cheshire (Gengar) – after the Cheshire Cat from Alice in Wonderland.
Grimlin (Sableye) – grim + gremlin.
Engarde (Honedge) – aka En Garde, the call to make fencers prepare for a bout by readying their defense or attack. It’s also obviously a French term.
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OKAY – How did you guys like Grimlin and Engarde??
Love em. Both were introduced in great and unique ways.

Because I am obsessed with them!!
I don't blame you. You did really well with them! :veelove:

I look forward to seeing them in future chapters... as long as you are able to lure me in for another needlessly and ridiculously long chapter. :copyka:

The antics the two of them are going to get up to omfg.
Not gonna lie, it sounds pretty fun! :mewlulz:

Giving Serena this specific Sableye was one of the first things I wrote for this fic! Grimlin’s going to be a menace! They match so well! I will unashamedly admit that Sableye is my favorite Pokemon hehe!
Sableye is one of my favorites too! :eyes:

But the sheer character potential that Sableye has?? Especially in Z-A specifically?? Insane. You guys are sleeping on the little goblin.
You are getting me really curious what things Grimlin will get up to... :eyes:

Shiny Ekans: This is based on something that happened to me in my play through. I was running around in the cemetery looking for a good IV Honedge, and then night turned to day, causing the spawn table to change, and literally at my feet a shiny Ekans spawned. I had to back away to even aim a Pokeball at it. I caught it, and boxed it. It was so weird. I also love that Serena just doesn’t care. She catches the shiny and immediately gives it away as nothing more than a device to make fun of Urbain lol.
It's a shiny mon. Who REALLY doesn't want a shiny mon? Even if it's only to keep it in a box somewhere. I figured there had to be more to the shiny encounter. It makes sense that it happened to you in-game!

The Z-A Royale invitation just SHOWING UP on your phone in the game was so weird! Like?? How did they know your number or who you even are?? HOW DID THEY KNOW? I was honestly creeped out in the game bc wtf.
Yeah... that sounds majorly sus.

I can’t be the only one who thought this, right? And also the fact that the invite came JUST as Urbain mentioned the player should join?? Bro WHAT?! There’s also a really big theme of surveillance in Z-A. One uber overt example: so many people keep saying, “we’re always watching you,” BUT HOW?! And there’s no payoff? Especially because spyware IS A THING in XY!! It would have been so easy to connect! Don’t worry, I’m connecting the dots!!
I agree with all your points here and think it's great to have this be a major thing to explore in your fic.

Oh, Serena absolutely did do something to earn the Pokemon Center nurses’ ire at the start of her journey.
I figured there had to be something. I guess I'll see if one of my theories ends up correct.

As a heads up, a LOT of XY content is going to be coming back in this fic.
That's fine. I didn't play that game either so it's equally unfamiliar to me! :unquag:

Let me know your thoughts on this chapter!
An 18k chapter and you have the gall to ask that... :copyka:

And yet... here I am. Merry freaking Christmas. (Literally! :unquag:)

What are you enjoying the most so far?
Serena. I've got a vicarious crush on her. I need to see Urbain stake his claim on her develop a relationship with her! :eyes:

What are you excited to get to?
The plot twists that I am REALLY hoping you will be implementing later on in the fic. I want to see the final battle with Nursed Grudge.

Personally, I can’t wait to leave the tutorial and let Serena run wild LMAO!!!
True. I do want to see her kick some butt in battles. I haven't got my fix for that yet so I'm hoping you will deliver. She doesn't have to kick butt in all of them, but I need to see at least some! The battle against Cleffa didn't count. It was too brutal against the poor thing to be satisfying.

Closing thoughts:
Why Slayer... why must you have these needlessly long chapters! :copyka: I can't believe you were charming enough to get me to come back to this... I really AM a glutton for punishment! This has been the single longest chapter of any fic I have ever reviewed. It's going to be a story I tell anytime I hear someone complain about chapter length. I'll use it to one-up them on how unbelievably long the chapter they reviewed was. But you want to know why I came back?
1. You replied to my review shortly after I posted it.
2. Your fic rocks.
3. You reviewed my fic shortly after AND you even reviewed both the intro and prologue! (You were nice about it too. It felt good.)
4. I was offering a bonus and felt bad that your chapters were too long for you to claim it.
5. I am hoping my suffering will inspire you to read and review my fic more.
6. You replied to my PM with so much energy and attention!
7. I apparently love torturing myself. :unquag:
8. It's kind of also a gift. Merry Christmas!

Ok now that I am done with my obligatory chapter length jabs, I can give some general thoughts. I'll start with the complainy/negative stuff. Urbain's character seems all over the place. Every time I think I figured him out, he does the opposite. It makes him seem inconsistent. I think Serena's guilt and resolution of it could use a little more thought. Perhaps you will disagree on that, but let me know what you think of my thoughts on it? Yeah, that's about it for complainy suff.

Time for gushing stuff! I love how you make Urbain bold, even if accidentally so at times. Makes for some hilarious scenes and I think low-key advances what will become a real romantic relationship between the two. I love every facet of Serena including the mini-skirt. :eyes: The opening of the chapter with her getting dressed was really cool. I don't think I've ever enjoyed reading someone getting dressed more than that! :okgon: Serena is so playful, mischievous, and alluring! :veelove: At her core, she cares and tries to live up to what she thinks a Champion should be. She is diplomatic in the way she considers the views and values of others and uses it to great effect! I love how you aren't afraid to make characters say bold things. Moire mentioning GUILLOTINES was amazing. It shows you aren't afraid to reference things more serious than Pokemon canon and makes the scope of what you might include unpredictable in a gripping way. I love how you made the nurses hate her. It's both hilarious and has the potential to be a serious plot point later! And Grimlin... man I love Grimlin. I mean, you do well with all her mon, but that one in particular rocks. I'm also a fan how you introduce completely random elements like the shiny Ekans. Stuff can seriously happen with no build up!

Enjoy this review! It's been the biggest most in depth review I think I've ever done. :cool:
 
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Neon

Bug Catcher
Pronouns
She/Her
A More Beautiful Lumiose

Chapter 1
I'm still reading the first chapter, but can I just say I love Sererna's reaction to AZ owning a hotel? Like it brought me back to the feeling and vibes from whenever everyone found out the homeless guy wandering the region settled down for a hotel of all things and I loved how there wasn't any second doubts (at least in this first section) about whether or not this was worth breaking her Lumiose-ban for. Yes it is. 100%. With a disguise because can't get too ahead of ourselves, but still! She needs to see AZ! She should've bought him clothes! I just love the energy lol.


[They were born ready! They wanted to be stars as much as the actual stars hung in the sky above!] Love this line it's so good!!
[They were finally reaching the heights of fame they knew they were destined for! All of their secret midnight practices the three of them had while Urbain was sleeping were worth it!] AH the babies I love them!!! Can't believe Serena can't have them all their so good so far!!

[The mental image of the towering AZ bumbling about with a flood of guests and struggling to do customer service was too good to pass up on. Serena would absolutely slap her face on whatever ad Hotel Z was putting out.] She's disguised so she's good but also she needs to tease AZ. It's good for her. Good for her mental health. (Also I just love how comfortable she is. This screams that she considers AZ a good friend of hers, because she's so comfortable teasing him like this. It's just so cute.)

Serena calling out the Mayor is so good! Like maybe she doesn't want to be here anymore but they can't just ruin the city!! It's a good city!! She doesn't have to be anti-Pokemon to be anti-urban plan development plan, she knows the history of the city and they do be ruining it.

Oh but now because of Jett, she's remembering why she stayed away from Lumiose (and Kalos) for all these years. Poor Sererna. But it's also a little nice to see her so quickly willing to step back into the midst just so another kid doesn't have to deal with what she did. She didn't deserve to deal with any of what happened in the XY plots- she just wanted to have an adventure with her friends.

(But I'm also not missing the fact that she's only eighteen. You write her so well I'm sorry for gushing this much I'm just really enjoying this story.)

[And no, you’re not excused for the construction work. It’s tacky. Do better.’] HAH.

Urbain's face blindness of Serena paired with the comedically planned ad in the background, ohhh I'm looking forward to when he does find out that's she the Champion :D!

I'm not the biggest shipper ever, but I am loving Serena being exasperated about Urbain's everything while also finding him cute. It's a very nice touch. And awwww Serena's not gonna pulling a Nemona and take a starter T-T. But oh well, she has Sensei and it's gonna demolish the-

Actually I like the Pancham. The Pancham has good survival instincts. She can sense the horrors!

[Gattaca, as instructed, used one of her ribbons to bat Cleffa away, sending it rocketing at high speeds before it slammed into the side of the nearby building with a loud resounding crack and a cloud of dust. Debris fell from the point of contact on the wall.] I'M DYING OH MY GOD THIS IS SO FUNNY AND GATTACA WAS SO PROUD XD.

[Floette looked over her shoulder back at the other Trainers and glared at them. How dare they interrupt her reunion with Serena! She swung her flower around and started to charge up a Light of Ruin, the only appropriate response to such a slight!] Every single Pokemon besides the starters- NOT SENSEI!!- is way too okay with murder. They would if the dumb humans around them let them. They would win everything.

AZ introduction time! They are great friends, you set up how comfortable they were with each other very well early. And also I like the old man jokes a lot, sue me.

The nickname central end notes are great I love all of them. Especially Sensei's. Sensei's was great. And also SHE STILL HAS YVETAL THE CITY IS GONNA PANIC IM SO EXCITED.

I didn't actually mean for this to be as long as it is, I have this review on another tab because I was trying to figure it out? I think maybe I went overboard a little but I also just really really liked this first chapter. Might take me some time to get to chapter 2, but once again, I loved this chapter and this premise so incredibly much! Thank you for writing and sharing!
 

Slayerofthewind

Chaos Gremlin
Pronouns
she/her
First off, thank you so much for checking out my fic @Nekodatta !! I meant to respond to your review earlier, but my week got kinda crazy schedule wise lol.

Lmao that was pretty much the fandom's reaction when he was first shown
It really was!! I actually wasn't going to write a fic at all for Z-A, and then after I got through the L storyline and Reaching Rank A mission, I opened up a doc and just started writing half sentence stuff just for myself to vent about how some of the story was handled. After writing a few bullet points, I realized I had way too many feelings about the whole thing and should just write the fic LMAO. The reason I mention this is because "AZ, the 3,000-year-old giant homeless senile war criminal who interrupted her Champion parade, owned a HOTEL?!" was for real one of, if not the very first line I wrote after my fragment bullet points LOL!!

Aww, making the three starter Pokémon get so into it was cute!!
The three starters are adorable and were on board with Urbain's advertisement program already in the game, so of course I had to lean into that and give them personalities!! :veelove:

I love Serena's sass. She's never letting him live that one down ... Understandably, I would say.
She's absolutely not going to let AZ live that down ever :mewlulz:

Didn't we all suspect them? I have to say, compared to the.... Nothingburger we got, I almost would have preferred them to be evil. Or just.... Actually do something concrete lol. But I love that you make Serena ultra suspicious of them here because of using Holo technology and mentioning "beauty", even if it's completely coincidental, because, were they actually evil, it *would* totally be something that you would then look back on and say "they were totally foreshadowing it right in the opening cutscene!!!"
As soon as I saw that "beauty" and holo-tech opening cut scene from Quasartico while playing the game for the first time, I was like, "Ohhhh, ok, I see how they're bringing back in the themes and plot points from XY, great, this will be interesting to watch it play out," ...and then nothing EVER addressed that really obvious and VERY HEAVY connection to Flare and XY???? And then it drove me crazy because there were SO MANY things story & lore wise in Z-A that would have played out very differently if the player character knew anything about XY like we did. Z-A felt like a sequel with no one there to recognize it was a sequel. Quasartico didn't have to be evil at all, but because there was NO discourse about their actions and the parallel to Flare was never actually explored because no one in the game except actual Flare members, who are NOT going to reliably narrate the events of the past lmao even if they have good intentions now, knows about what happened 5 years ago. L?? Are you kidding me? His character arc would be soooo much more facinating if the player character knew who he was and couldn't come to terms with the fact that Lysandre didn't remember anything. Like??? It just felt like all of the extra depth of Z-A got dropped because of that.

I genuinely thought this opening scene was foreshadowing (and a BUNCH other stuff that I won't go into bc spoilers for the fic hehehe) the WHOLE time I was playing the game, and then it was never mentioned again by anyone RIP meeeeeeeeee.

For once I actually used the male character because I found Taunie cute, but Urbain actually works so much better here. He's got massive himbo energy ahah
Totally hear you on that, Taunie is adorable!! I love that her outfit looks put together and cute, and Urbain is just wearing sweat pants and a t-shirt. As soon as I saw that, I knew they were going to be very different characters. A lot of their dialogue, mannerisms, and speech patterns are very very different. I've watched a lot of coverage of both games while prepping for this fic, and it's really interesting to see how Taunie and Urbain are completely not the same person.

Urbain plays out as a charming gullible idiot who I totally 100% hands down believe would accidentally get into debt with the mafia, and Taunie has her head on her shoulders a little better than that. I believe that point less with her character. Taunie seems to pick her words a bit more carefully and generally thinks before she speaks... Urbain does not. They're both very complex interesting characters, literally don't know how some people miss that, and I really can't wait to dive into Urbain's character deeper and give him the more fleshed-out character arc he deserved!!

I love the description here, it's just hilarious and very pleasant to read. I've enjoyed your omniscient narrator in general actually, it took me a moment to get used to since I don't read it often but it's a lot of fun!
Also I live for descriptions of cute adorable Fairy types being absolute menaces, just like they should.
Thank you!! Humor and hijinks galore are inbound as the fic continues lololol :mewlulz: 3rd person omniscient POV is my FAVORITE to write in! I totally get it might take you a moment or two to get adjusted to it, but I really love the freedom it gives me to dive deeper into characters on a beat-by-beat basis... and make more jokes lol.

Fairy-types absolutely would be unhinged menaces wrapped up in pretty paper. They are unassuming little divas, and I love them.

So, this first chapter was a nice setup to the story, we can already see some changes compared to canon thanks to the main character being Serena and not a random nobody. And they are important changes!
They are SUCH important changes, and from here on out, I'm going to be mixing-up cannon and changing things more boldly while still also making it the Z-A storyline that hopefully feels fresh and giving the depth we were missing in cannon. I want to make this a reimagining/revamping of the story, not just a random story that is set in Z-A. We're doing the whole game storyline (eventually) woooo!!!!

The implications of the Champion taking part in the ZA Royale, her being immediately suspicious of Quasartico, actually having a connection with AZ and knowing about his past instead of being completely in the dark about it... It all immediately adds a lot of possible plot points that I can't wait to see explored.
Oh, we're gonna explore all of them. The research I am doing for this fic!! Like I'm even trying to include as many small NPC info drops to make this as accurate and "threads connecting" as possible between XY and Z-A... I love doing the work, I am way too into this fic haha, but I bring it up to emphasize that I really am trying to make this fic the "sequel" we really wanted while still putting my own spin on things.

Talking about the characters, I'm enjoying Urbain's characterization and there's some nice chemistry with Serena.
Thrilled you're loving Urbain's characterization so far!! I mentioned it before, but his character is fascinating and needed more room to complete his arc in the game. We're gonna do that. I'm also going to do the same thing and flesh out all the characters. They deserved more time and arcs.

One thing I liked about Serena is that while she knows that she is quite a lot stronger than probably everyone else, she didn't look down on Urbain but actually looked forward to doing a double battle with him, it's nice that she doesn't think of him as a noob but instead someone she can still have fun battling with.
Yes!! Training Pokemon and being a Trainer has so much more to it than just having high-level mons!!

I'm very curious how you are going to handle her strength across this story (and stuff like apparently having Yveltal with her just chilling), because having an OP main character can lead to some interesting dilemmas. After no one can challenge you anymore, what do you do from there?
So I'm really interested to see how you are going to handle some of the other participants in the Z-A Royale.
I REALLY cannot wait for you to get to the rest of the chapters lolol. There's currently 5 chapters written, I still have to post the last two chaps here, but we absolutely go into this. Strength and "being OP" are really compelling topics, especially the idea of what a "Champion" really means in-verse. I feel that it's not something often explored that much in an intricate character-driven way that I can't wait to tackle here. But it's not going to be "Serena steamrolls everything with lv 100 Pokemon" absolutely not!!!!! That would be boring, but I'm also not going to be completely nerfing her. Imo, I think I found a really enjoyable to read balance, but that's a very biased opinion lol. I also just love causing my characters just the most problems, so while Serena might be competent, oh boy am I gonna make her struggle anyways and make things hard for her~~!

You mentioned you're going to continue reading, so I can't wait to see what you think of the rest of the fic whenever you get to it :) Thank you again for checking it out, and I'm THRILLED you're loving it this much already!
 

Slayerofthewind

Chaos Gremlin
Pronouns
she/her
TANGOOOO!! YOU CONTINUED!! This review is amazing! I am definately appreciating the time you clearly put into this! Thank you!!!!

Here I am staring down the 18k beast and the one immediately behind it as well.
Hehehehehehehe... guess how long chapters 4 and 5 areeeeeee!!!!

Well, besides the quality of your writing and enjoyable characters anyway...
Thrilled to hear you say that!!

(Arceus help me :copyka:)
No ✨

...the crap did I just read?? :unquag:
The Spider and the Fly is a very famous poem! The line "said the spider to the fly" is so famous that it's essentially an idiom at this point.

Please please PLEASE let us watch her crush some opponents! I wanna see her wreck some stuff!
Oh she's gonna be crushing opponents and doing it in style!! Spoiler not spoiler, but Serena actually battling in real Pokemon battles comes into play starting in chapter 4.

The dressing scene felt so dynamic and active! :eyes: I imagined it as a dramatic anime dressing montage as I read it.

The graphics and lack of voice acting in the game is appalling. Your fic is more vivid than the game, for sure!
Love that you loved the scene!! The lack of voice acting in Pokemon is a short end, but it doesn't detract from my experence at all playing it! Lol when I play the game, I'm essentially imagining this level of detail and character subtext for everything anyways in real time, so it's still pretty vivid for me!

Another stylized line break. These are pretty cool and this one conveys the glam, snark, and confidence Serena is feeling.
Nailed what I was going for! I LOVE making these, and I try to always make them fit in with what is happening in the story or, if possible, act out the whole scene or moment haha. They're just fun to do!! I do them in both of the fics I have (my other fic is not a Pokemon one. If you happen to be a Katekyo Hitman Reborn and HunterxHunter fan and enjoy niche crossovers, check out my other fic on AO3!).

So, you don't really paint a picture for me what this looks like, but you give it a vibe which I can fill in with my imagination. Probably a good way of handling descriptions since it keeps things simple without overly bloating them.
Sometimes vibes and descriptions that evoke emotive understanding are more vivid than spelling things out, but it depends! Sometimes being more explicit is more evocative and needs more words to tackle. It really depends!

He seems to be catching her eye a bit! :eyes: Next thing you know there will be a scene break and Serena will have him pinned to a wall as she makes out with him! :mewlulz:
He's catching her eye, but she's very much the kind of person who is thinking, "yeah, I have no time for a relationship right now, I have shit to do," and is absolutely the type to admit someone is cute, but not develop actual feelings until later. Serena's not gonna admit to having a crush, and she doesn't yet to be clear, or do anything beyond flirting for a whileeeeeeeeee. Hope you like slow burn :mewlulz:

Serena's the playful type who will flirt, but is actually very hesitant to start anything beyond that and takes a long time to truly catch feelings. On the other hand, Urbain is definitely the type to fall hard and fast for someone. Serena makes things overly complicated in her mind, Urbain doesn't. Urbain is gonna have to work to get her actual attention lmaooo :quag:

Essentially:
Urbain: *Develops a crush immediately*

Serena: *Many many chapters later* There is a slight very small potential chance I might have a inkling of a crush on Urbain. (Finally admitting it even though she's clearly been into him for a while before this but won't let herself put two and two together)
Lida: (Who had a front row seat to them flirting the whole time, their whole score of many pseudo dates, Urbain being an idiot, and teased Serena about the whole thing relentlessly at every turn) *Deadpan staring at her* Yeah, no shit, Serena.

I love how the fic doesn't even try to hide his attraction to her. It just goes full steam ahead with it! :mewlulz:
Like I said above, Urbain falls quick and fast, but he's also not the kind of person who thinks about his words that much before he says them. So he tends to put his foot in his mouth a lot and speaks before he thinks LOL.

Wait what? But he had a team of unevolved mon! Serena must be patronizing him... but he's too infatuated to take it as anything other than a compliment! :unquag:

Urbain want's to be patronized by her though. Serena can tell. She is just playing along with that too and he eats up every minute of it! I'm enjoying the dynamic.
Nope! She does actually mean this one seriously. If you remember in ch 1, Serena commented that she wanted to battle with him in a doubles battle. You don't have to have high-level mons to be an interesting Trainer. Serena can see the talent and that he has the personality to make for an interesting Trainer strategy-wise. I.e. Battling with or against Urbain would be fun and not boring in her opinion.

She does do the "I'm making fun of you but you can't tell" thing a lot with him lol, just not here, and enjoys the flirting banter.

...However, something I think you might be misunderstanding about Urbain, but I've really tried to make clear and even explicitly said it a few times in the fic and throughout the chapter hahahaha, is that for real Urbain does not realize she is doing that and genuinely thinks she's flirting with him. Urbain is a confident guy that will make a bold move and has no problem doing that, but subtext 9/10 times really does go riiiiiiiight over his head. Especially when Serena is very good at acting lmao.

Ah, but the problem is that she is still only a person underneath all that. People have limits both physically and mentally and she had reached her mental limit with everything that happened. But her thoughts are understandable. It is her job to be there to prevent this kind of crap.
Yes exactly to all of this. We're gonna go deeeeeeeeep into this character beat for her over the course of this fic.

Oh... Serena played him at chess before? I thought she just met him? If this bit is what Urbain thinks of himself, it seems odd he would understand why he sucks at chess. Is this Flottes impression of him? Did Flotte see Urbain play chess? Does Urbain play chess with AZ? Does Urbain play chess with Flotte? So many questions!
No, no, this is Urbain's POV here. I think you're reading into this a little too much because it's very widely known that to be good at chess you have to anticipate and think many moves ahead for both your move and your opponent. He's played chess before and sucked at it because he couldn't do that. However, who he played chess with is something that's probably not cannon, but imo makes sense given his backstory and I won't be dropping it here bc spoilers lololol.

With statements like that, I bet Serena will be thinking of a few ways... :eyes: Daaaang Urbain! You're bolder than I thought! 😎
Oh yes he did. And don't try to pretend you don't secretly like it. :mewlulz: The tough girl always having to protect everyone and take responsibility? There is part of you that wants the exact opposite.
Ok soooooo, this line was actually just Urbain putting his foot in his mouth :mewlulz: Urbain isn't the kind of guy to be that explicitly possessive this quickly. He really does mean it as "the team's claim on you," but he's team leader, and his wires got crossed because Urbain is either accidentally very smooth or an idiot. However, Urbain does have a degree of possessiveness and jealousy to his personality that does come up in game. But with him, it starts with "the team" before it transitions to "me" explicitly in his head if that makes sense, and stems from ✨trauma and abandonment issues✨

Urbain is a lot more casual and just kinda saying the wrong thing but is just trying hard to impress the girl he likes than you seem to be taking him for. He really is that guy who just says the wrong thing when he means to say something else. He's straightforward and earnest. Thus, the reason for why I stress that he acknowledges he's not the type to think that far ahead and scheme -- he's simple, recognizes that, but is meaningful when it counts. Would he say something possessive? For sure and eventually, but at this point, it's "the team's" possessiveness, while still hinting at his possessiveness and jealousy threads.

Serena is more just baffled he actually said that in this instance, but you're right onto the idea of, "The tough girl always having to protect everyone and take responsibility? There is part of you that wants the exact opposite," being a thing. But she would never step aside when things are actually happening to the city/region and etc. She doesn't want to be alone. We will get DEEP into that in this fic, but this convo with Urbain before about her failing and emphasizing her guilt in general stopping her from working with other people and asking for help in this chapter is done in an effort to start the conversation of this character beat of "not wanting to be alone, but has always been alone and has trust issues" for her.

This is also why I made this chapter this length -- remember how I mentioned I plan chapters with an arc in mind? This chapter is just about her starting to let people in. Like the BARE MINIMUM. Which is why I wanted to start it with Urbain pressing her to get her to let them help her, and she doesn't want to accept, hating the idea. Then, we have Serena and Urbain bonding a little and exploring the city. Urbain emphasizes that Team MZ is going to help her again upon Serena being once again hesitant to believe in Team MZ when they see the wild zone for the first time. They get to wild zone 4 and meet Moire, someone who needs help, and Serena feely and easily gives help, but can't accept it from other people. Then, Serena develops new bonds with Pokemon, aka "getting help and building a team," but she rationalizes people and Pokemon differently.

Serena's guilt comes to a head when she apologizes and takes responsibility for the incident that happened to Moire because this is the first time she's seeing someone directly affected by the mess she feels she caused entirely on her own. However, this is the first time that Urbain realizes the massive guilt she's carrying. Moire emphasizes that change is natural and apart of life. Serena begins to realize that change is the opposite of stagnation -- the very thing she's fought against for years. Moire and Urbain stress that it's not just her fault. Does Serena really believe that yet? Hell no, but she recognizes that she couldn't have stopped change as a concept from happening -- she would have been no better than the very organization she destroyed 5 years ago if she did, no better than Lysandre. So Serena is willing to begin considering letting someone help her this time. That's why I wanted to end it where I did and include what I did. The ending cemetery convo is mirroring the convo with Urbain re: joining Team MZ.

Is Serena's guilt over and handled? Fuck no lmaooooo!!! This chapter is more so the introduction to Serena's overall character arc starting as she begins to learn to heal. This is gonna be a thing for a longggggggg time.

I wanted to go into detail about this here because I thought it was a good point to do it, but also because you brought up later in your notes about Serena's guilt being wrapped up too quickly, so I wanted to emphasize this whole point because of that :) Oh boy are we just at the tip of the ice berg with her character development. She's super not over things, but is starting to recognize that maybe she needs to start changing.

I don't know about that. His recovery is either entirely accidental or perfectly planned. But since we have seen he can't plan worth a crap, it means it's genuine and that makes it all the more effective. 😎
He really is just trying to slap words together in a fruitless effort LOL. The line did nottttt land for Serena hahahahaha!!! You'll know when things do land with her lol because she will actually react or think things haha!

I love how they jab at each other regarding Gattaca not being an Umbreon. She uses Gattaca's petty revenge against her! :mewlulz:
Oh they jab at each other all the time, but love each other dearly. What Serena is not saying is that she's just as petty as Gattaca LMAO!!!

This whole interaction made me laugh. :mewlulz:
No, no it made me laugh too! I am absolutely laughing the whole time I write these chapters lol... wellll, more so cackling haha!

Huh? Who is this gal? And how could she possibly understand the situation quickly enough to tell Urbain to turn it down?
LMAO this is Lida, we love Lida. She also literally means turn it down in terms of noise levels and volume HAHA!

Urbain does not turn it down! Urbain does not tolerate challenges to his dominance of Serena! Urbain tells the Lida to silence its incessant mouth flapping! :unquag:
LMAO NAH Urbain is much more of the subtle possessive until something like, say, a love rival (***foreshadowinggggggg****) comes into the picture, and even then it would start wayyyyyy more low key. Like in the he doesn't even realize he's explicitly doing it kind of way.

What IS this Tierno it speaks of? The mighty Urbain is not impressed.
Tierno is Lida's brother, and there's absolutely 0 romantic interest there. Tierno was one of the 4 friends/rivals you have in the XY games -- Tierno, Trevor, Shauna, and Calem (if you play as the male character, Calem, you get Serena as the last rival instead.) Calem is the real rival out of the four, Shauna is in second. Tierno just wants to be a dancer, Trevor just wants to do research and complete the Pokedex.

Fine. The Urbain will consider this as a 'noodle incident' as far as his purposes are concerned.

Yikes, I must be careful or Urbain will take over my review! Bad Urbain. BAD!
LMAOOO!! No I love that you are liking Urbain, he's a really fun and complex character that presents as "simple and gullible" but has a lot more to him depth wise!! Plus, he's the one who's actively driving the whole romance B-plot on his shoulders because Serena would have never made the first move hahahaha!! If he's wanting to get the girl in the end, he's gonna have to work for it and fight past all her "I don't have time for this" and "you're cute, but I am a professional, I am working, and I don't catch feelings fast" energy lol.

Oh this is GREAT! 🤣
LOVE this interaction HAHAHA!! Because she's not wrong, but once Urbain hears it that way he's like, "WAIT OH SHIT NO I DIDN'T MEAN IT LIKE THAT!! DON'T TELL LIDA THAT!!" And because he knows Lida will never drop it and will make fun of him constantly for it.

Dang Serena. That was pretty savage. Especially considering the secret you keep even from yourself that you liked it... (Technically my head-canon, but I wouldn't be surprised if it hit the mark.)
She didn't like it, more so just neutral on it. Urbain's lines either really land or do not land at all. This one did not land HAHAHA!!

Urbain... how the mighty have fallen... 😔
Sadly, Urbain was never that mighty to begin with HAHAHAHAHA!!

Well, Urbain certainly recovers quickly...
That he does! Urbain is the type to bounce back from teasing/jokes from his friends like this quickly. ...But also more so in this instance because he doesn't want to look more like an idiot in this moment and is happy to pivot lol.

Whaaat. That is not making sense to me. Where is all her confidence coming from if she isn't going to use her Champion team? There is no good reason I can think of that she should be disallowed from using it. Even if she can train another team and knows how to train a team, there is no reason for her to have that much confidence since other trainers will have more experienced teams. If she encounters a Cool Trainer from victory road with her new team, she will be destroyed.
It's gonna make sense and has a lot to do with Serena's plan that will slowly be revealed to you. However, I think you might not know this because it's a feature of the newer games, you have mobile boxes now. Ie, you can switch your Pokemon out of your party anywhere and anytime. She's training a new team explicitly for the Z-A Royale, not "getting rid of her old team." Her Champion team are very much going to be active, involved, and used throughout the whole story. But the media is going to play a HUGE role in this story, and Serena's concern about it being a bad PR look is VERY valid and will be explained in much greater depth later in chapter 3 and 4.

She's not disallowed from using it, in fact, she absolutely could use them, but it would work against alllllll of her plans and would also give her terrible PR in the media. I'd go into why that is now, but I want to leave some surprise for you!! That's why she's saying she'll use Sensei in Z-A Royale but bench him until later.

Also, battling above your Rank level in the Z-A Royale is a thing in the games. Additionally, and we'll go into more depth on this later in the fic, namely starting in chapter 4, but I enjoy competitive battles and generally strategizing, so I'm going to be accurately showing how levels are essentially a problem only if you let them be. Like I'm using damage calculators, making viable move sets and strategies considering both mainline competitive battling wise and a bit of "anime Pokemon battles" (it's gonna make sense when you see it, and does NOT feel unrealistic or unbalanced), dealing with stats, etc. A level 10 Cleffa isn't inexplicably knocking out a legendary unless there's actually an in-game way to do that in battles.

Like for example, there was a doubles strategy I ran for a while that involved using a level 1 Mimikyu back in the Sun/Moon days of the competitive and it was NOT a gimmick. It worked reallllly well and was very fun! I love strategizing and team building, so you can bet you're not going to feel disappointed with how battles are going to play out. They're going to feel earned, deserved, and based in actual game mechanics (plus a little bit of anime stuff, but also Z-A reeaaaally changed up the battle system, so I'm mixing everything together and making something that reads well)!

Old or not, if her goal is to wreck things, it makes no sense not to use the best mon available to her.
Her goal is to wreck things for the company Quasartico. That does not mean yet literally battling Quasartico and big bads. She's WAYYYY more of a menace and more effective at causing problems for Quasartico if she uses new mons in this tournament, this will become more clear over the next few chapters lol. Don't worry, I do explain.

Only having one stronger mon... that seems like a mistake. If she encounters a strong opponent with type advantage she could have trouble. Would be best to have two from her Champion team, just in case. Then again, I doubt she is the type to have a solid contingency... She is too confident in herself for that. I wonder if that will come back to bite her in the butt later?
For anything outside of the Z-A Royale, her Champion team is always on hand and is an option (remember, mobile always accessible boxes are a mechanic now). But for the Z-A Royale?? New mons. Again, if you're not catching on yet, we're gonna get into it later. Drop revealing everything right off the bat is no fun lol, so in this chapter, I'm building the ideas we'll dive into later. Though, you could start to figure it out from the hints I've dropped already, and I've dropped a lot of hints hehehe...

I think Cynthia would say the same kinds of things except her emphasis would also include dragons.
Absolutely. Please see chapter 3.

Huh, something tells me that Agatha was exactly like Serena when Agatha was younger...
For sure!!!! Ghost Trainers and Ghost-types are theater kids and you can't convince me otherwise.

This bit is pretty nifty to see her reasoning behind these types.

Also, perhaps I should include why my MC prefers Fire in my own fic? I probably should. I think that was an oversight... 🤔
I think it's a great opportunity for characterization that people often overlook utilizing! Why people pick and bond with Pokemon or have a preference for a certain type, etc, all great character things to explore.

The XY games are all about life and death, so to emphasize those themes and make them even more apparent in what her original journey would have been (which we will also cover in this fic) and continuing that in Z-A, making Serena a Ghost-type and Dark-type Trainer really was a no brainer.

Well, like most girls, I would imagine!
TBH you'd be surprised!! I myself LOVE cemeteries as does my mom. They're genuinely so fascinating and beautiful.

Wait you mean Urbain actually realized what was happening? I was expecting him to think the opposite being fooled by the fakeness from both of them! Aww... I wanted some giggles... :sadbees:
No, no, they were being that fake that it was sooooooooo obvious to literally anyone and everyone.

It IS funny, but WHY do they do it?! Please tell me you will explain at some point later. It would be massively laaaame if you do not! :unquag:
Yes, eventually LMAOOO!! For now, it is a mystery for you because Serena herself does not know. She will always continue on her quest to figure it out.

So, this probably would have been a good place for a chapter break. Obviously you would dress it up a bit to make it a chapter end, but you easily could have split it here. So now I'm going to stare at you for a while. 😑 Staaaare!
No ✨

Hahaha! Though I did actually already explain why I specifically wouldn't break the chapter here in a previous comment response above, sooooo see above.

I always liked Sableye. Cool design and I love how typing prevented it from having any weakness. Too bad their stats and moves suck. I used one in my original play-through of Sapphire GBA. But in a fanfic, Sableye is finally free of such limitations! :eyes:
Sableye is the best mon! Also, Sableye can be veryyyy good on a team and competitively!! It has a really solid move pool and it's hidden ability, Prankster, is absolutely broken. It compensates for Sableye's slow speed stat by making speed irrelevant. You can shut down your opponent before they can do anything. Sableye is actually pretty bulky and can run either physical or special sets, and has different strats you can run if you play singles or doubles. Sableye got even more play when Megas were introduced in XY/ORAS and became a huge force in the meta. As Mega Sableye, Sableye gets a stats boost and it's ability changes to Magic Bounce, which makes Prankster base Sableye even more of a problem for people to deal with. The Prankster to Magic Bounce combo is wild.

Also, any Pokemon, except hilariously Luvdisc, can be competitively viable in some way/run a good strategy if you try hard enough.

Urbain is randomly observant at times.
He is observant when it comes to overt things, like if someone is uncomfortable from body language. Urbain is a little bit of an empath, but not really a logic guy. He can figure things out and start to pick up on people's behavior the more time he spends with them. Also, Urbain might be an idiot, but he's not stupid -- if that makes sense.

Huh... Sableye was trying to reject it earlier. The switch to being excited about it feels slightly too easy/fast here.
Nah, Grimlin was more so rejecting it out of principle, but if he's being offered it and being told it's okay, he really really does want the jewelry more than anything, and that's always gonna win out for him in the end. Grimlin's also not the most morally upstanding little guy haha. Jewelry is one of his top priorities LOL. New friend says it's okay? Great, he's totally past that because look at that ringgggg damn that's a ring. Is essentially what's going on here.

Wow! So many little details that go into the personality and quirks of her team! :eyes:
Pokemon are characters just as much as Serena or Urbain is, and I will be absolutely treating them as such!! All the Pokemon in this fic are gonna have personalities!


You really seem to get the most out of this 3rd person omniscient style! I'm a bit envious of it, actually. The ability to explore the thoughts and desires of not only a single character, but potentially all of them! It gives more depth and personality to your characters.
Yes~!! I really love writing in 3rd person omnipotent! It gives me a lot of freedom to explore things and characters beat-by-beat as we go... and also make more jokes haha!

Yeah, a battle doesn't have to be all drawn out to serve its function. It's cool that you understand this.
Yup!! Though we are gonna get more actual battles soon in chap 4!

Ok, that was massively cool in both execution and how it was tailored to Honedge. Serena really knows how to read mon and appeal to them.
I LOVE this scene!!

What? He was given a gift by Serena and he accepts it with disdain??

Her holding his hand earlier was more like an eye-roll gesture from her. We didn't see Urbain complaining then! It was like Serena didn't really find enjoyment in holding his hand and just did it to help him get over his 'ridiculous' fear. It was something Urbain could have considered degrading of his manhood since it was like treating him like a scared little kid, but he gleefully accepted it anyway because he got to hold her hand. Yet here, when Serena gives him a SHINEY mon as a gift, he has the opposite reaction? It seems like inconsistent characterization.

I don't like it.
I really think you just misread it, that's all! Urbain LOVES getting a gift from her, whatever it may be, the dismay (NOT distain) is not about the Pokemon, it's about the fact that he thought she was blatantly flirting with him to the extent that she was hitting on him actively, got his hopes up REALLY high, and then realized that no, none of that was happening and she was making fun of him. He's dismayed about the fact that Serena was NOT hitting on him NOT the gift hahahaha! Urbain loves the gift, which I made sure to emphasize with him calling the Ekans "buddy" and saying that they were in the same boat, but he got emotional whiplash from what Serena said accompanying the gift.

This is different than the hand holding because the hand holding thing was still kinda-cute ish flirting on Serena's part and also wasn't being masked by a joke. Like she said explicitly, "if you're gonna be scared, I'll hold your hand," there was no misunderstanding the line, ie there was no way Urbain could get his hopes up and then let down -- it was what it was: banter -- which is different than Serena seemingly actually hitting on him and dropping essentially a pick up line, but then Urbain takes it as a pick up line, gets SO excited about it, then immediately let down that no, it wasn't a pick up line. That's what he's dismayed about, not the gift.

If anything, I think this instance is SO in character for him and I loveeee this beat lmaooo!! I think you really just read it wrong haha!

Sidequest complete! I enjoy how you used it to net some new mon for them and you did well with the descriptions and interactions. It was a nice thing to help Moire. I don't expect to see her again in the fic after this chapter though as I expect her purpose was to be a side-quest. But who knows? Maybe you plan to bring her back for more things later? I wouldn't totally put it past you.
Moire is coming back!! She also pops up in the DLC for another incredible continuation of this quest, and is the head of the school in game. Love her.

Ok, sure, but I think the main point is that if she had been present, the whole Quasartico fiasco would be no where NEAR as bad is it currently is. She had the power to prevent much of that if she had been present. I could see this line of thinking taking some of the edge off, but not taking away the guilt entirely.
Yup, exactly this.

Sounds like she is now thinking that past success gives her a free pass at ignoring the responsibility that comes with her current power and status.
Ahhhh, no not at allllll lmao. I think you just missed the subtext on this line. This is meant to be a somber line that implies that she still thinks this is all still her fault. That everything that is going on here with Quasartico, who she believes is connected with Flare and the fact that she didn't do good enough wrapping things up lead to the entire state of Lumiose today. This line reinforces her guilt and seeing this as her fault. She's not thinking of five years ago as a success at all. She'd never think that. What happened five years ago scarred her. The version of the "Flare take down" story she gave Grimlin was purposefully a fluff piece that avoided all of the actual things that happened that were important and focused on the part she was willing to talk about while glossing over all of her trauma. Just as Urbain called it, Serena was being dramatic and acting. You'll get parts of the real story soon.

The bottom line here is that things would currently be much better if she had been there and took responsibility, but she would have needed more mental strength than she had in order to do all that. She needed a long break.

Staying and preventing bad things would have worn her down and completely broke her spirit after all the stuff she went through leading up to it. She would become a shell of the person she currently was, like I think AZ was at one point.(I'm surprised you didn't want to use an angle like this given how it should be an easy example for your readers to relate to.) If that happened, things would eventually become even worse than they were here. She may be Champion, but she is still a person and was only 13 when all that stuff went down. That's a lot to put on her shoulders even if she was capable. Too much, honestly, and extremely unfair to her. I think her mental load and age would be much more powerful angles to use here.

No, it's not ok that she wasn't there, but at the same time, she couldn't mentally handle it and trying to do it anyway would have broken her. The fact that she got away and rested is the reason she is able to be there helping now. Ultimately, I think she will do more good due to the way things played out than if she had stayed. She can't help others if she breaks herself.
Yep, you're right on with all of this! And don't worry, the Serena-AZ parallel is something I've already started setting up since chapter 1 and is going to be a BIG thing throughout this whole fic.

She assumes that Quasartico won't have the power to stop and control them all. Try telling people in China to rise up against their injustice and see how well that works for them... Oh wait, they've tried before and were beaten down into submission and it's been that way for decades with no sign of things ever turning around. The will of a population can be manipulated and beaten down to the point where resistance is unfeasible. Places like North Korea control their population so hard that they aren't even allowed to move to another country to escape.

Quasartico isn't far enough along yet to be at that point yet, but once they do it will be too late. Only someone like Serena could stop them beyond a certain point, but even she can't be everywhere and still needs to sleep.
Kalos and Lumiose isn't China though, they're France. And the French loveeeeeeeeee revolution, protesting, rebellion, and standing up to authority no matter the cost. No one does revolution and protesting like the French, it's literally in their blood. Z-A needed more interjection of this. Like are you kidding me?? Lumiose is Paris, and the people aren't screaming in the streets at the government for every little change?? Pff, no. I completely understand the power dynamics at play in places like China and North Korea, however, those are very very different circumstances and situations. I could write a whole huge like essay long thing about this and go wayyy deep into the China and North Korea examples, because I personally find power dynamics fascinating, but I'm not going to only because this fic is essentially me doing that anyways as we go deeper into it LOL. The whole fic is about power dynamics, monitoring, surveillance, and suppression. For example, I'm actively drawing on Michel Foucault (along side other French philosophers and movements) theories of various modes of power, his book Discipline and Punish, to explore that here. Great book by the way, all his work is, Foucault is an excellent philosopher.

Additionally, something you probably won't know because you didn't play the game -- Quasartico isn't evil! They're just trying to do very very poorly done patch jobs in an attempt to help but are really doing something massively illegal by doing so. And the spyware thing is NEVER addressed in the game. Literally never. It's insane.

So Moire is going to think all these nice things that might help Serena feel better, but not actually say them? Ok then... :copyka:
She essentially did already say them, and often times people prefer to say what they mean in less direct ways that help facilitate what they know the other person needs to hear rather than fluff.

You are getting me really curious what things Grimlin will get up to... :eyes:
A LOT OF SHIT OMFG!!

True. I do want to see her kick some butt in battles. I haven't got my fix for that yet so I'm hoping you will deliver. She doesn't have to kick butt in all of them, but I need to see at least some! The battle against Cleffa didn't count. It was too brutal against the poor thing to be satisfying.
See chapter 4 omfg. See chapter 4.

Why Slayer... why must you have these needlessly long chapters! :copyka:
Pfffff-- needless? Nahhhhhh.

This has been the single longest chapter of any fic I have ever reviewed. It's going to be a story I tell anytime I hear someone complain about chapter length. I'll use it to one-up them on how unbelievably long the chapter they reviewed was. But you want to know why I came back?
1. You replied to my review shortly after I posted it.
2. Your fic rocks.
3. You reviewed my fic shortly after AND you even reviewed both the intro and prologue! (You were nice about it too. It felt good.)
4. I was offering a bonus and felt bad that your chapters were too long for you to claim it.
5. I am hoping my suffering will inspire you to read and review my fic more.
6. You replied to my PM with so much energy and attention!
7. I apparently love torturing myself. :unquag:
8. It's kind of also a gift. Merry Christmas!
Genuinely so honored you put so much time into this review! You really didn't have to go that hard with the in-depth reactions to everything!! But it made me write a long response to everything you said too lol. It's SO hard to not spoil everything aaaaaaa!!!

Ok now that I am done with my obligatory chapter length jabs, I can give some general thoughts. I'll start with the complainy/negative stuff. Urbain's character seems all over the place. Every time I think I figured him out, he does the opposite. It makes him seem inconsistent. I think Serena's guilt and resolution of it could use a little more thought. Perhaps you will disagree on that, but let me know what you think of my thoughts on it? Yeah, that's about it for complainy suff.
As I said before, I reallllllly just think you read those two Urbain moments wrong lol. And we are NO WHERE near done with Serena's guilt, and this was NOT a resolution to it. More so, this is the start of that conversation about her guilt. Like I would wrap that whole character beat up in 1 chapter?? Hell no. This is a character study piece for all the characters, we're doing full fleshed-out long arcs for everyone.

Time for gushing stuff! I love how you make Urbain bold, even if accidentally so at times. Makes for some hilarious scenes and I think low-key advances what will become a real romantic relationship between the two. I love every facet of Serena including the mini-skirt. :eyes: The opening of the chapter with her getting dressed was really cool. I don't think I've ever enjoyed reading someone getting dressed more than that! :okgon: Serena is so playful, mischievous, and alluring! :veelove: At her core, she cares and tries to live up to what she thinks a Champion should be. She is diplomatic in the way she considers the views and values of others and uses it to great effect! I love how you aren't afraid to make characters say bold things. Moire mentioning GUILLOTINES was amazing. It shows you aren't afraid to reference things more serious than Pokemon canon and makes the scope of what you might include unpredictable in a gripping way. I love how you made the nurses hate her. It's both hilarious and has the potential to be a serious plot point later! And Grimlin... man I love Grimlin. I mean, you do well with all her mon, but that one in particular rocks. I'm also a fan how you introduce completely random elements like the shiny Ekans. Stuff can seriously happen with no build up!
LOVE that you're really enjoying how the story is playing out so far!!! Serena is a joy to write!! I really do enjoy reading all your reactions to everything!!

Pokemon can get pretty serious and dark tbh. The plot of Pokemon Y, which I'm explicitly making Serena the protag of, was literally "Team Flare is going to kill all life on the planet except for them to make the world more beautiful in their own image." Team Flare was literally a murder cult. They're French!!! OFC we need guillotines!! But also yes, I'm going to be taking the in-game events of XY and Z-A appropriately seriously and addressing what cannon lore and story should've addressed instead of glossing over some of the ramifications on the characters of such really terrible things.

Grimlin is my favorite too lolololol. I have A LOT of his antics pre-written, and the first Grimlin bit starts in chapter 3 :eyes::eyes::eyes:. He's going to be a problem, but we love him for that.

Yep!! There's always randomness! But also, I like the parallel of the idea that Serena is always trying to plan everything, she is hyper too much in her head, over thinks everything, and then there's always something she cannot predict or plan for that surprises her, instinctual and simple -- just like Urbain. The whole thing was also supposed to be a, "the shiny Ekans is like Urbain in many many more ways than just one" thing. 1 in 8,192, indeed.

Enjoy this review! It's been the biggest most in depth review I think I've ever done. :cool:
I DID!! This was a treat, and happy holidays!!!
 

Goolix

Junior Trainer
Hello! I'm here on a recommendation from Tango! I'm reviewing Chapter One.

The username was “hotelzlumiose” with the display name “Hotel Z - Lumiose City.” The account had several other short promotional videos, all only racking up single digit views, though one notably stood out for having a whopping 25 views.
Extremely realistic for small businesses trying to promote themselves through social media. Sigh!
Chikorita, Totodile, and Tepig all made noises of agreement. They were more than ready for the spotlight! They were born ready! They wanted to be stars as much as the actual stars hung in the sky above!
I see later in the fic that you're using an omniscient narrator and narrating the thoughts of the last character that had the focus on them.
I would have fewer exclamation points so close to each other - it weakens the emphasis on the exclamation mark. In this case, I might do something like this:

They more than ready for the spotlight - they wanted to be stars as much as the actuals stars in the sky above!
It keeps the enthusiasm and has one big emphasis.

“Chika?! Chik, chik!!” Chikorita disbelievingly poked Totodile and Tepig, who were equally as shocked.

“Te, pig.” Tepig muttered, overwhelmed. They were finally reaching the heights of fame they knew they were destined for!
Glad to know that the starter Pokemon are as delusional as Urbain!
The girl smiled radiantly. “Yeah! I came back to Lumiose just to stay in Hotel Z because of it.”

Urbain’s heart fluttered, and he couldn’t help himself from impulsive shouting, “REALLY?!” This was one of the best days of Urbain’s life. It wasn’t even that she was planning a trip to Lumiose and happened to see his advertisement. No. She came to Lumiose JUST to stay in Hotel Z because of HIS video!
:mewlulz: You've really captured how weirdly out of touch Urbain is with reality. I can't wait to see your touch on Jacinthe!
If somehow the video didn’t go viral, Serena would step in and find another way to make her very important new dream a reality.
And now I'm imagining Serena paying for a bot farm to make Hotel Z go viral. I know she can just use her celebrity to promote it, but the image of her paying to have randomly generated users boosting it is too funny.
“Got it!” Urbain raised a finger in front of lips to make a “shh” gesture like he was keeping a secret. “We’ll be super inconspicuous then. Very low key.” He bowed, one arm across his middle, and the other arm out to the side. “Only the most secret of escorts to the hotel for the lady in disguise.” He winked at her.
He's so over the top, but that's what makes him charming.
“Please,” Serena scoffed, “as if I would stumble while wearing designer shoes!” she screamed, outraged at the thought.
I'm certain Serena is the type of girl who could navigate cobblestones in heels.
Also, I think that you accidentally left two dialogue tags in: both "Serena scoffed" and "she screamed [...]" are in the same sentence. Scoffing and screaming are two different levels of intensity, so I'd pick whichever one you want to be the dominant emotion to be the tag.
“YOU TAKE THAT BACK!” Serena screeched, scandalized. Her sheer indignation at the slight dominating any need to be sneaky. She stormed over to the two Trainers. “It is vintage Boutique Couture! But I guess a backpacker like you wouldn’t appreciate high fashion.”

“So what if it costs a lot!” the backpacker fumed. “It’s still ugly!!”

Affronted, Serena was ready to charge her. “WHY YOU–”
I know from the bottom of my heart that this backpacker is the type to not appreciate the Margiela Tabis 😤 Educate this philistine, Serena!
Pancham suddenly regretted all of the choices she’d made leading to this moment. She messed up. Big time. That was not a normal Greninja!! NO WAY! What was that thing eating!? The souls of the damned?!

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Really liked this insertion for comic effect. It's like when you've beaten the game and then you go back to an earlier map and face off a trainer you somehow missed the first time around. They're confidently telling you they're gonna beat you with their Caterpie and then you barely breathe on them with your fully pimped out team and they go down. A fun moment to capture in writing.
Urbain watched as she left, unable to tear his eyes away from Cleffa’s Pokeball. “Honestly? I think I heard it pop like a balloon when it hit that wall.”
Yowch.

You've really got a great sense of voice for these characters! I have no prior characterization for Serena, but I felt like I knew her right away. I'm intrigued by her trauma-informed reaction to city development. Like, girl I'm pro historical preservation too but we gotta build new things! I do think you capture that she's really taken aback by how sudden it is and that she's comparing it to other events in her mind (even if I don't remember the story of X/Y very well). She wants to be someone who's responsible, not another winner dumping their responsibilities on the next sucker to take the crown.

Urbain is true to life - adorably guileless and single-minded in chasing his Hotel Z and team MZ goals. I like the flirtationship between the two of them already; I do think he'd be the type to hit on girls whether for the fun of it or just accidentally because he's just That Kind Of Guy.

I'm not sure if there's any sort of writing crit you're looking for (or not looking for?) in particular. Going with third person omniscient is interesting! It does make it easier to see how the different characters are interpreting the same situation right away as opposed to having to wait a chapter for a perspective swap.

You've got a good thing going on so far! I'm happy to see the Z-A story being taken seriously as a subject for fic. It's got a lot of space to be fleshed out and I agree that having the champion from X/Y be the 'tourist' means there's more opportunities to talk about connections to the past. Plus she was in Hoenn researching mega evolution (OR/AS...), so it ties back in to the main theme of mega evolution anyway. (As an aside, if you wanna read more Z-A fic, BraviaryScout wrote a one-shot covering the beginning of the game with a view on food as a cultural object - you might enjoy it!)
 

Slayerofthewind

Chaos Gremlin
Pronouns
she/her
@Neon thank you SO much for checking out my fic!! I loved reading your review!!

Quick edit, forgot to say this, but since you've reviewed, I've gone back and added art to the Sensei vs Pancham scene in chapter 1!

I'm still reading the first chapter, but can I just say I love Sererna's reaction to AZ owning a hotel? Like it brought me back to the feeling and vibes from whenever everyone found out the homeless guy wandering the region settled down for a hotel of all things and I loved how there wasn't any second doubts (at least in this first section) about whether or not this was worth breaking her Lumiose-ban for. Yes it is. 100%. With a disguise because can't get too ahead of ourselves, but still! She needs to see AZ! She should've bought him clothes! I just love the energy lol.
Yessss to all of this!! Having someone actually know AZ and find out about the hotel ownership thing is so funny to me! But the thing is, really no one would know AZ, and I mean actually know AZ, other than the player character from XY. Soooooo this was one of the many many reasons why I wanted to put Serena in the Z-A storyline. Something I'm gonna do through this fic is cover Serena's XY journey as well, though drip fed, and change/enhance the XY story as well. The AZ and Serena friendship and parallel goes deep.

Ofc there would be no doubts!!! AZ doing this of all things is well worth violating her Lumiose and Kalos ban for!! To Serena, this is just about the most insane thing she could have seen on social media. Not only is she like, "I need to see this for myself," she's also like, "I'm leaving right now, holy shit." The urgency is both hilarious and also shows how close they actually are.

AH the babies I love them!!! Can't believe Serena can't have them all their so good so far!!
I love them too!! One of the reasons why I wanted Urbain to keep them all is to continue their little advertisement stardom dreams with Urbain :veelove: They believe in him, believe in themselves, and want to put in the work! I couldn't take them away from him and disrupt the trio's dreams ;-; their journey to stardom is going to continue to be a plot line. Serena might not get one of them, but they're going to still be in the story and have personalities!! All the Pokemon in this fic are going to have personalities~!

She's disguised so she's good but also she needs to tease AZ. It's good for her. Good for her mental health. (Also I just love how comfortable she is. This screams that she considers AZ a good friend of hers, because she's so comfortable teasing him like this. It's just so cute.)
Yes!! Love that you picked up on that. I was going for that! Serena is very comfortable with AZ. They are well and truly very good friends.

Serena calling out the Mayor is so good! Like maybe she doesn't want to be here anymore but they can't just ruin the city!! It's a good city!! She doesn't have to be anti-Pokemon to be anti-urban plan development plan, she knows the history of the city and they do be ruining it.
Absolutely!! There's a lot of complexity to the Urban Development Plan's impact that's not really addressed in the game, and one thing is the architecture and the history of the city. Which is odd to me given that a big theme in Z-A and XY is "learning from the past," and "history repeats itself." With how much Serena values being fancy and AZ, the walking historical monument himself, it made sense to me that she'd be a history and architecture aesthetics person. We're gonna do waaaaaay deep into all of the other complexities of the ramifications of the Urban Development Plan in this fic too :)

Oh but now because of Jett, she's remembering why she stayed away from Lumiose (and Kalos) for all these years. Poor Sererna. But it's also a little nice to see her so quickly willing to step back into the midst just so another kid doesn't have to deal with what she did. She didn't deserve to deal with any of what happened in the XY plots- she just wanted to have an adventure with her friends.
Yeahhhh... Serena is traumatized, the events of five years ago genuinely haunt her, and we're gonna get into that & what happened over the course of the fic, but at the end of the day, the thing that will make her start to finally heal and change is the strength of her character and determination to not allow what happened to her to happen to anyone else.

(But I'm also not missing the fact that she's only eighteen. You write her so well I'm sorry for gushing this much I'm just really enjoying this story.)
Love that you aren't missing that!! Because that's something I was trying to emphasize too -- she's still a kid. It wasn't okay that it fell on her shoulders when Serena was 13, and it's still not okay that she has to be the one to do something, but she's going to do it anyways because at the end of the day, that's who she is. She's going to act. But now, unlike five years ago, heavy is the crown, and she's actually in a position of authority this time, and that changes everything.

Also, NO DON'T APOLOGIZE!! PLEASE GUSH MOREEEEEE!! I am genuinely thrilled to see you enjoying the fic this much and the characters aaaaa!! I really love seeing your reactions and comments on everything SO MUCH!! You want to write a wall of text gushing about Serena's character or one random scene? Would literally make my day omg. I also just love talking about this fic, and so I'm always down to go back and forth about stuff like this too!!!

I'm not the biggest shipper ever, but I am loving Serena being exasperated about Urbain's everything while also finding him cute. It's a very nice touch.
Totally hear and understand you on this. For me, I don't do a ship or write romance unless the ship really works from a character development/character arc perspective. They also have to have chemistry and their interactions need to be on point! Meaning, even if you're not a big shipper, I think you should still end up enjoying the romance B-plot (romance is not the main focus of this story) because the only reason I'm doing it in the first place is because Urbain/Serena actually works so well from a narrative and character development standpoint -- like it makes the fic's narrative stronger.

It's also gonna be a slow burn LMAO!! Very much a "he fell first, she fell harder" kind of thing, except it's gonna take a long time on Serena's part to even admit to herself that she potentially has a crush on him. She's the type of person to flirt and admit someone is cute openly, but won't make a move past that because she actually takes a long time to catch feelings. She's very much a "I have no time for a relationship, the city is literally on fire," and "I am working, I am a professional, you are cute, but I don't have feelings for you," kind of person. While Urbain is over here openly realizing he has a crush on her very quickly, because he would be the type to fall quick and hard for someone -- the simple and uncomplicated way of dealing with things, while Serena overcomplicates everything. He's gonna have to workkkkkkk to get her attention lol.

But oh well, she has Sensei and it's gonna demolish the-

Actually I like the Pancham. The Pancham has good survival instincts. She can sense the horrors!
With how many gung-ho crazy Trainers are in Lumiose right now in the Z-A Royale, someone's gotta have some common sense!! LOL! But also, I like the idea that Pancham just wanted revenge on someone she thought she could take down, Urbain. She did not sign up for fighting a max level Greninja!! She thought she was gonna fight a Chikorita, Totodile, or a Tepig! LMAO!!

I'M DYING OH MY GOD THIS IS SO FUNNY AND GATTACA WAS SO PROUD XD.
I literally was cackling to myself when I wrote this scene!! THRILLED you enjoyed it!!! I kept rewriting the descriptions here to make it as vividly horrifyingly funny as possible hehehehehe... To be fair though, I am often cackling while writing this fic LOL!

When I was re-going through the game to write this fic, and that waitress sent out a Cleffa of all things, I immediately thought that was literally the WORST and most hilarious Pokemon you could ever send out against the Champion, and ran with that idea hahahaha!! I feel like people don't really think about how being that strong would make random battles actually hard because you have to worry about not killing your opponent. Because imagine that scandal?? "Champion kills Elementary School Kid's Rattata!!!" They are done in the media omg. Like I just imagine skipping an early game Trainer, and then accidentally triggering the battle in the post-game with a Lv 100 legendary as your lead Pokemon, and your opponent sends out a lv 5 Rattata... babe that thing is dying holy shit.

Also, the Cleffa thing is going to be a reoccurring bit :veelove:

Every single Pokemon besides the starters- NOT SENSEI!!- is way too okay with murder. They would if the dumb humans around them let them. They would win everything.
They areeeeeee. Though, to be fair, Floette is literally a war veteran and implied war criminal sooooooooo..........

AZ introduction time! They are great friends, you set up how comfortable they were with each other very well early. And also I like the old man jokes a lot, sue me.
YAY!! Love that you liked this part!! I loved writing it, and I really did want to show how comfortable they are with each other in a fun way. Serena is this very dramatic, theatrical, and teasing person, but AZ is always seen as a very reserved person. I think showing them interacting like this is a fun way to show how comfortable AZ is with her too. He softens and will make a joke as well -- it's a two way street.

ALSO YES I LOVE THE SILLY OLD JOKES!! Serena's bit of calling AZ a "national relic" is going to keep being a thing because I imagine she called him that the first time she found out how old he was and never let that go.

The nickname central end notes are great I love all of them. Especially Sensei's. Sensei's was great. And also SHE STILL HAS YVETAL THE CITY IS GONNA PANIC IM SO EXCITED.
Thrilled you love the nicknames and the end notes! If you couldn't tell, I also love gushing about things, so the end notes are just me gushing about stuff LOL! Every time I write a chapter, I'm always editing down my end notes to make them much less long and "more acceptable" because I don't want to make you have to sit through them too much hahahaha!!

YES SHE STILL HAS YVELTAL!!! Serena is going to cause the most chaos for this city while also doing a lot of needed good for it. One of my guiding stars of writing is, "wouldn't it be funny if..." and then taking it way too seriously. I will write a whole character arc for a bit if I think it would be reallllly funny to do so. This is a crack treated seriously fic while also being a in-depth drama-filled character piece, and I lovingly dub this fic "the most chaotic attempt at revising the PLZA plot," so OF COURSE Serena still has Yveltal!!! I can write so many more problems for everyone and Serena if she does~!!! I love causing my characters problems lolololol. Drama and humor go hand in hand!!

I didn't actually mean for this to be as long as it is, I have this review on another tab because I was trying to figure it out? I think maybe I went overboard a little but I also just really really liked this first chapter. Might take me some time to get to chapter 2, but once again, I loved this chapter and this premise so incredibly much! Thank you for writing and sharing!
You might not have meant to make the review long, but I LOVED that you did!! Seriously, I love that you were so in the story and enjoying it that much that you just had to write more :veelove:!! Always feel free to drop text walls or just random little reactions and excitement stuff, I love them!! Totally take your time, but I'm so glad you're going to continue with this fic, because I actually think chapter 1 is the least interesting chapter so far HAHAHAHAHA!! There's a lot more stuff to come, and starting in chapter 2, I start mixing up cannon and deviating from cannon while still making it the same Z-A plot that hopefully just feels more fresh and fleshed out. This is supposed to be a revamping/reimagining, so it's gonna follow the Z-A game, just giving things more depth and exploring problems the game didn't address. If you're loving the fic this much from just chapter 1, I really think you're gonna love the rest of the chapters I have so far and the fic as a whole!!!

Thank you again for taking the time to check out this fic!!
 

Goolix

Junior Trainer
It is time now for Chapter Two!

It was Serena the Hero of Kalos, defeater of Team Flare, and Champion at their door step, striking fear in the hearts of the damned with her miniskirt. For those who knew, her haunting visage would be an undeniable echo of her past victories.
I like the idea that the canon art of Serena is also her Most Iconic Look as champion. Of all the fem!trainers, I think she's the one with the cutest outfit and, being Kalosian, the most fashionable. It makes sense to me that she would take the symbolism of clothing and appearance seriously.
Serena laced up her black high tops and donned her pink felt hat, placing white sunglasses on top of it.
I had to read this twice to figure how the sunglasses and the hat related. I think it could be a little clearer, like sliding the sunglasses around the crown of the hat, or resting them on the brim.
The lobby existed in muted harmony, nothing stood out too much on its own.
I like the idea that the lobby is so whatever that the only thing you can say about it is that it existed.
“I don’t doubt that,” Serena agreed. “From last night, I got the impression that you’d be quite the interesting trainer. Why did you decide to join this tournament and not the Gym circuit?"

Urbain blushed slightly from her acknowledgement. “I’m trying to become the strongest Trainer around so I can help protect Lumiose.
It's a good question to have since gyms definitely exist in Kalos! And it adds characterization to Urbain that he wants to protect Lumiose, which he is quite consistent about throughout the game.
And the sheer nerve they had to contact her directly, knowing full well exactly who Serena was, to invite her to take part in their little tournament like they were doing her a favor. Their invitation was so patronizing! “Will earn the right to call themselves one of Lumiose’s strongest Trainers??” SHE WAS THE CHAMPION!!

They were belittling her while also implying that somehow Quasartico’s reach extended past Serena’s own dominion and authority as Champion by asserting they could offer her a “wish” she could not already fulfill herself. And if she participated, all the while, Quasartico could reap the benefits of having the backing of the Champion.
So, I'm not sure if Quasartico will actually turn out to be evil or partially evil, but she absolutely comes off paranoid here that they're personally targeting and spiting her. Definitely unwell sounding.

“Correct, but “not good” isn’t really the term I’d use. “Complete structural unethical behavior and total illegal invasion of privacy of the masses” is more apt in this case.” Serena made a note not to forget to discover whatever other skeletons the company had in their closet too.
"Complete structural unethical behavior" is kind of odd. If "structural" is modifying "unethical behavior", then you're saying "unethical behavior which is structural." Which is odd sounding. If you wanted to show that the behavior is persistent and organized, "structured unethical behavior" is more idiomatic. But I would reword this, because the emphatic "complete" is just adding too many modifiers.
Team MZ?” Serena asked incredulously. Not another damn Team! And a Team sunshine boy was on? Oh no, who tricked him!
:mewlulz: You know, you should be skeptical when anyone tells you about Team Anything in the Pokemon world.

Urbain winced. “Not gonna lie, that stings. I guess I’ll just have to find some other way to stamp my claim on you.”

Serena blinked. “…Excuse me?” He did not just say what she thought he did!
:eyes: Oh no he didn't!!
“You have no right to complain. Let’s not forget that this,” she gestured to all of Sylveon, “was your choice. So you get the honor of being in the photo with me. Really show off your unintimidating adorable self by jumping in my arms and cuddling with me lovingly as you wrap your ribbons around me.”

Gattaca was probably the only Sylveon out there who evolved into one because she wanted to spite her Trainer out of an Umbreon and accomplished that by loving her too much so Serena would end up with the exact opposite, a Fairy-type. Gattaca loved her trainer, obviously, she was clearly a Sylveon, but it was love motivated by long-game petty revenge.
This kind of hurts because in Z-A I evolved an Eevee at night, hoping it would turn to Umbreon, but I forgot that it had a fairy move... I lost a few Eevees to the Sylveon trap. In your canon, does Eevee choose which form it evolves into, or did Serena forget that Gattaca had a fairy move?
Urbain eyed her skirt. “…Can you roll in a miniskirt?”

Serena raised an eye brow. “Yes.” Urbain seemed oblivious to her judgement and continued to stare at her skirt.
Is she wearing safety shorts underneath, or just blasé about people seeing her underwear? I knew women really into fashion who just didn't care if other people saw their underwear and wore really short skirts with no safety shorts. It's not clear which she is.
“Because Ghost and Dark-types are just the cutest!!” Serena clasped her hands together in front of her and sighed dreamily. “I’ve always wanted an Aegislash! They’re so noble and regal! And a Zoroark! They’re sooo adorable and fluffy!”
Aegislash deserves more love! I had one on my team for Z-A until endgame.
Ghost Pokemon came back from the dead. They wanted to live and enjoy the simple things in life regardless of the terrible circumstances that begot their death. Ghost Pokemon loved life more than any other. Reducing them to solely being an incantation of death as most did was wrong, they represented the continuing cycle of the world and rebirth.

Ghost Pokemon were the bridge between life and death, between destruction and creation.
I like her explanation for why she likes Ghost Pokemon, and the idea that they love life so much they came back for a second helping. It adds to her characterization.
The wind rushed out of Urbain’s sails and the butterflies in his stomach crashed into the ground. ‘Yeah,’ Urbain moped, ‘getting that kind of compliment was too good to be true.’ He looked down at his new shiny Ekans’ Pokeball in dismay. ‘Guess you and me bud are in the same boat here.’
:( Cold as ice, Serena. You can't hit a man with "you're 1 in 1892" and then imply he's disposable.

I like that we get to see more of Serena's mindset throughout this chapter, as well as actual reasons as to why Quasartico might be suspicious. We also get to see Serena sort of scheming, and it's interesting to see her weaponize her appearance reputation to try to win. Her favorite Taylor Swift song is "Mastermind" isn't it
 

Tango

Mascot of the Doduo Alliance
Location
beyond the Nexus
Pronouns
He/him
Partners
  1. doduo
TANGOOOO!! YOU CONTINUED!! This review is amazing! I am definately appreciating the time you clearly put into this! Thank you!!!!
Yes, I continued for a number of reasons. The review really did take forever, but I'm glad it seemed to have made your day. :quag:

If you want to do an extra thank you, I'd love another review from you for my fic.

Hehehehehehehe... guess how long chapters 4 and 5 areeeeeee!!!!
Dear Arceus, please contain this crazy girl! She's ripping apart the fabric of reality with the length of her fic chapters!!? :copyka: :wowzard:

The Spider and the Fly is a very famous poem! The line "said the spider to the fly" is so famous that it's essentially an idiom at this point.
Too clever. Tis lost on this simple brain of mine. You do you though.

Oh she's gonna be crushing opponents and doing it in style!! Spoiler not spoiler, but Serena actually battling in real Pokemon battles comes into play starting in chapter 4.
Excellent! :mewlulz:

Love that you loved the scene!! The lack of voice acting in Pokemon is a short end, but it doesn't detract from my experence at all playing it! Lol when I play the game, I'm essentially imagining this level of detail and character subtext for everything anyways in real time, so it's still pretty vivid for me!
I could probably try to do something similar, but after watching so many shows and playing so many games with voice acting, the lack of it in a Pokemon game is unforgivably lazy.

Nailed what I was going for! I LOVE making these, and I try to always make them fit in with what is happening in the story or, if possible, act out the whole scene or moment haha. They're just fun to do!! I do them in both of the fics I have (my other fic is not a Pokemon one. If you happen to be a Katekyo Hitman Reborn and HunterxHunter fan and enjoy niche crossovers, check out my other fic on AO3!).
Yeah, they are really neat and creative. I'm not into the other fandoms you write, though. :unquag:

Sometimes vibes and descriptions that evoke emotive understanding are more vivid than spelling things out, but it depends! Sometimes being more explicit is more evocative and needs more words to tackle. It really depends!
Well you seem to know when it's a good time to go for a vibe vs a full set of details.

He's catching her eye, but she's very much the kind of person who is thinking, "yeah, I have no time for a relationship right now, I have shit to do," and is absolutely the type to admit someone is cute, but not develop actual feelings until later. Serena's not gonna admit to having a crush, and she doesn't yet to be clear, or do anything beyond flirting for a whileeeeeeeeee. Hope you like slow burn :mewlulz:
Actually, I adore slow burn, but only when it's done right. So far, you seem to be doing it right. There is almost nothing currently to it, but that's fine and makes it all the more savory when it develops later! :quag:

Serena's the playful type who will flirt, but is actually very hesitant to start anything beyond that and takes a long time to truly catch feelings. On the other hand, Urbain is definitely the type to fall hard and fast for someone. Serena makes things overly complicated in her mind, Urbain doesn't. Urbain is gonna have to work to get her actual attention lmaooo :quag:
Well, I'm confident Urbain is up to the task. He has an indomitable spirit and will not rest until he has the affection of his crush!

Essentially:
Urbain: *Develops a crush immediately*
So relatable... 😅

Serena: *Many many chapters later* There is a slight very small potential chance I might have a inkling of a crush on Urbain. (Finally admitting it even though she's clearly been into him for a while before this but won't let herself put two and two together)
I get the feeling that most Urbain's of the world never get to be with their Serena. But in your fic, dreams can LIVE! :wowzard:

Lida: (Who had a front row seat to them flirting the whole time, their whole score of many pseudo dates, Urbain being an idiot, and teased Serena about the whole thing relentlessly at every turn) *Deadpan staring at her* Yeah, no shit, Serena.
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Like I said above, Urbain falls quick and fast, but he's also not the kind of person who thinks about his words that much before he says them. So he tends to put his foot in his mouth a lot and speaks before he thinks LOL.
Also relatable... :copyka:

Nope! She does actually mean this one seriously. If you remember in ch 1, Serena commented that she wanted to battle with him in a doubles battle. You don't have to have high-level mons to be an interesting Trainer. Serena can see the talent and that he has the personality to make for an interesting Trainer strategy-wise. I.e. Battling with or against Urbain would be fun and not boring in her opinion.
Well, yeah, I remember her saying that. I thought she was just patronizing him there too. The dude has to be massively weak in Pokemon battles vs her. I guess the point is that she is so strong that she can pair up with anyone and still win. At that point, sure, I guess it becomes about everything else about battling other than raw power since she has more than enough raw power already.

Now with Serena's new team that is an entirely different situation... Depending on how skilled Urbain really is, he might be able to fight along side of her without being an obvious detriment. I guess depending on how you write it, he might even do better than Serena. If he does, it wont really be him being better than her since she won't be using her champion team. I do see the potential for some interesting battles.

She does do the "I'm making fun of you but you can't tell" thing a lot with him lol, just not here, and enjoys the flirting banter.
That's fine. Urbain will take those jabs as he continues to chase his dream of becoming Serenas boyfriend! :wowzard:

...However, something I think you might be misunderstanding about Urbain, but I've really tried to make clear and even explicitly said it a few times in the fic and throughout the chapter hahahaha, is that for real Urbain does not realize she is doing that and genuinely thinks she's flirting with him. Urbain is a confident guy that will make a bold move and has no problem doing that, but subtext 9/10 times really does go riiiiiiiight over his head. Especially when Serena is very good at acting lmao.
Hmm you are sounding a tad frustrated on this point. To be clear, I am not trying to troll you even if it might seem that way to you. Maybe I'm just being thrown a loop by your third person omniscient style. I'm not used to reading fics with it and it tends to jump around a bit and also reveal more than I am used to most fics doing. I tend to speculate about lots of things but it seems this style wants to inform the reader of everything there is to know about any character on camera therefore if one speculates it will be wrong by default. But maybe I'm going too far in the other direction? Bottom line is that I am trying to understand the characters. To that end, your comments to clarify things are helpful.

Yes exactly to all of this. We're gonna go deeeeeeeeep into this character beat for her over the course of this fic.
Well that sounds promising! :eyes:

No, no, this is Urbain's POV here. I think you're reading into this a little too much because it's very widely known that to be good at chess you have to anticipate and think many moves ahead for both your move and your opponent. He's played chess before and sucked at it because he couldn't do that. However, who he played chess with is something that's probably not cannon, but imo makes sense given his backstory and I won't be dropping it here bc spoilers lololol.
Ugh. I'm not used to my thought process being wrong. You're right here. Not sure why I wasn't looking at it from that way. I think I'm just really not used to third person omniscient as a reader. In fact, I think this is the first thing I have ever read that is like this. To be clear, I am pretty fascinated by it and am still finding it enjoyable even if I may struggle with reading it some. I also expect it to be less of an issue the more of it I read.

Ok soooooo, this line was actually just Urbain putting his foot in his mouth :mewlulz: Urbain isn't the kind of guy to be that explicitly possessive this quickly.
Oh. I thought he had said it that way by subconsciously slipping up in a way that he himself didn't fully understand.

He really does mean it as "the team's claim on you," but he's team leader, and his wires got crossed because Urbain is either accidentally very smooth or an idiot.
Very well then. I shall take it for the way it was intended. Either way it was hilarious. :mewlulz:

However, Urbain does have a degree of possessiveness and jealousy to his personality that does come up in game. But with him, it starts with "the team" before it transitions to "me" explicitly in his head if that makes sense, and stems from ✨trauma and abandonment issues✨
Good to know.

Urbain is a lot more casual and just kinda saying the wrong thing but is just trying hard to impress the girl he likes than you seem to be taking him for.
Part of it probably stems from my lack of playing the game. I'm not already used to the character, so I'm prone to make odd mistakes regarding interpreting his words and actions. I don't mind you correcting me on things though.

He really is that guy who just says the wrong thing when he means to say something else. He's straightforward and earnest.
Also relatable 😅

Thus, the reason for why I stress that he acknowledges he's not the type to think that far ahead and scheme -- he's simple, recognizes that, but is meaningful when it counts. Would he say something possessive? For sure and eventually, but at this point, it's "the team's" possessiveness, while still hinting at his possessiveness and jealousy threads.
Got it. :okgon:

Serena is more just baffled he actually said that in this instance, but you're right onto the idea of, "The tough girl always having to protect everyone and take responsibility? There is part of you that wants the exact opposite," being a thing.
Ooo! I got a thing right! :eyes:

But she would never step aside when things are actually happening to the city/region and etc. She doesn't want to be alone. We will get DEEP into that in this fic,
That sounds exciting!

but this convo with Urbain before about her failing and emphasizing her guilt in general stopping her from working with other people and asking for help in this chapter is done in an effort to start the conversation of this character beat of "not wanting to be alone, but has always been alone and has trust issues" for her.
Makes sense.

This is also why I made this chapter this length -- remember how I mentioned I plan chapters with an arc in mind? This chapter is just about her starting to let people in. Like the BARE MINIMUM.
You and I approach chapters differently. I approach them more on place/setting. You approach them on character development points.

Which is why I wanted to start it with Urbain pressing her to get her to let them help her, and she doesn't want to accept, hating the idea. Then, we have Serena and Urbain bonding a little and exploring the city. Urbain emphasizes that Team MZ is going to help her again upon Serena being once again hesitant to believe in Team MZ when they see the wild zone for the first time. They get to wild zone 4 and meet Moire, someone who needs help, and Serena feely and easily gives help, but can't accept it from other people. Then, Serena develops new bonds with Pokemon, aka "getting help and building a team," but she rationalizes people and Pokemon differently.
Ok sure. When you lay it out like that, I can see what you are doing. But without you laying it out like that there is no way I would ever notice. MAYBE I'll be able to notice something like that in future chapters, but had you not mentioned this, I have no confidence that I would. You seem to be a very different sort of author than I am used to interacting with, but it makes it kind of fun seeing how you do things and learning to see things from your perspective.

Serena's guilt comes to a head when she apologizes and takes responsibility for the incident that happened to Moire because this is the first time she's seeing someone directly affected by the mess she feels she caused entirely on her own.
Sure, that makes sense.

However, this is the first time that Urbain realizes the massive guilt she's carrying.
Yep.

Moire emphasizes that change is natural and apart of life. Serena begins to realize that change is the opposite of stagnation -- the very thing she's fought against for years.
Wasn't Flare trying to change things in a bad way that needed to be stopped? In that sense, she fought to preserve stagnation, didn't she?

Moire and Urbain stress that it's not just her fault. Does Serena really believe that yet? Hell no, but she recognizes that she couldn't have stopped change as a concept from happening
Ok, true. Keeping things exactly the same would be impossible and it seems that even small bad changes she was feeling guilty for, but since the focus was on the big things like with Quasartico, I wasn't looking at it from a small things perspective.

-- she would have been no better than the very organization she destroyed 5 years ago if she did, no better than Lysandre.
I guess the goals of Flare would have resulted in stagnation even if the method to get there was to employ lots of change.

So Serena is willing to begin considering letting someone help her this time. That's why I wanted to end it where I did and include what I did. The ending cemetery convo is mirroring the convo with Urbain re: joining Team MZ.
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Is Serena's guilt over and handled? Fuck no lmaooooo!!!
Ok, but it still sort of made it seem that way to me. Good to know it's not that simple though.

This chapter is more so the introduction to Serena's overall character arc starting as she begins to learn to heal. This is gonna be a thing for a longggggggg time.
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I wanted to go into detail about this here because I thought it was a good point to do it, but also because you brought up later in your notes about Serena's guilt being wrapped up too quickly, so I wanted to emphasize this whole point because of that :) Oh boy are we just at the tip of the ice berg with her character development. She's super not over things, but is starting to recognize that maybe she needs to start changing.
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He really is just trying to slap words together in a fruitless effort LOL. The line did nottttt land for Serena hahahahaha!!! You'll know when things do land with her lol because she will actually react or think things haha!
I think the problem is that I don't know how much is being held back vs what is being disclosed. When it sifts focus, perhaps the other characters are feeling or thinking things that I am not aware of? Just because it says some stuff about a character, does that mean it is saying all there is that could be said? Something I will need to learn to adjust to, it seems...

Oh they jab at each other all the time, but love each other dearly. What Serena is not saying is that she's just as petty as Gattaca LMAO!!!
I mean, she could do both at the same time and it would still be fine and amusing regardless.

No, no it made me laugh too! I am absolutely laughing the whole time I write these chapters lol... wellll, more so cackling haha!
I love it when that happens. It means your writing some comedic gold. :mewlulz:

LMAO this is Lida, we love Lida. She also literally means turn it down in terms of noise levels and volume HAHA!
Well she didn't say noise or hold a finger over her mouth with a "shhh" so what was I supposed to think? :unquag:

LMAO NAH Urbain is much more of the subtle possessive until something like, say, a love rival (***foreshadowinggggggg****) comes into the picture,
Wait... WHAT?! :eyes: Oh man that is going to be some serious drama! Oof! I feel like I've been socked in the gut just thinking about it. Urbains anticipated emotional damage is vicariously attacking me. 😅

and even then it would start wayyyyyy more low key. Like in the he doesn't even realize he's explicitly doing it kind of way.
Makes sense.

Tierno is Lida's brother, and there's absolutely 0 romantic interest there. Tierno was one of the 4 friends/rivals you have in the XY games -- Tierno, Trevor, Shauna, and Calem (if you play as the male character, Calem, you get Serena as the last rival instead.) Calem is the real rival out of the four, Shauna is in second. Tierno just wants to be a dancer, Trevor just wants to do research and complete the Pokedex.
I see. Thanks for the context!

LMAOOO!! No I love that you are liking Urbain, he's a really fun and complex character that presents as "simple and gullible" but has a lot more to him depth wise!! Plus, he's the one who's actively driving the whole romance B-plot on his shoulders because Serena would have never made the first move hahahaha!! If he's wanting to get the girl in the end, he's gonna have to work for it and fight past all her "I don't have time for this" and "you're cute, but I am a professional, I am working, and I don't catch feelings fast" energy lol.
That's ok, because you can move a mountain with a spoon. You just have to dig one spoonful at a time... :unquag:

LOVE this interaction HAHAHA!! Because she's not wrong, but once Urbain hears it that way he's like, "WAIT OH SHIT NO I DIDN'T MEAN IT LIKE THAT!! DON'T TELL LIDA THAT!!" And because he knows Lida will never drop it and will make fun of him constantly for it.
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She didn't like it, more so just neutral on it. Urbain's lines either really land or do not land at all. This one did not land HAHAHA!!
I guess knowing that there will be romance between the two also makes me latch onto things in ways I might not if I didn't know that was coming.

Sadly, Urbain was never that mighty to begin with HAHAHAHAHA!!
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That he does! Urbain is the type to bounce back from teasing/jokes from his friends like this quickly. ...But also more so in this instance because he doesn't want to look more like an idiot in this moment and is happy to pivot lol.
Makes sense.

It's gonna make sense and has a lot to do with Serena's plan that will slowly be revealed to you. However, I think you might not know this because it's a feature of the newer games, you have mobile boxes now. Ie, you can switch your Pokemon out of your party anywhere and anytime.
Oh. NOPE! I had no clue that was a thing! That considerably changes things.

She's training a new team explicitly for the Z-A Royale, not "getting rid of her old team." Her Champion team are very much going to be active, involved, and used throughout the whole story. But the media is going to play a HUGE role in this story, and Serena's concern about it being a bad PR look is VERY valid and will be explained in much greater depth later in chapter 3 and 4.
Well, if she isn't going without access to her main team, then there is no harm in doing what she is doing and the PR benefit is certainly a valid angle to take!

She's not disallowed from using it, in fact, she absolutely could use them, but it would work against alllllll of her plans and would also give her terrible PR in the media. I'd go into why that is now, but I want to leave some surprise for you!! That's why she's saying she'll use Sensei in Z-A Royale but bench him until later.
Got it. Yeah, if she doesn't need them, then it makes sense she would use her new ones. Since she can still access the others, there is no harm.

Also, battling above your Rank level in the Z-A Royale is a thing in the games. Additionally, and we'll go into more depth on this later in the fic, namely starting in chapter 4, but I enjoy competitive battles and generally strategizing, so I'm going to be accurately showing how levels are essentially a problem only if you let them be.
Uh levels are a problem though. I think Cleffa would like some words with you. :mewlulz:

I get what I think you are trying to say though. That levels won't automatically determine a battle in most cases.

Like I'm using damage calculators, making viable move sets and strategies considering both mainline competitive battling wise and a bit of "anime Pokemon battles" (it's gonna make sense when you see it, and does NOT feel unrealistic or unbalanced), dealing with stats, etc. A level 10 Cleffa isn't inexplicably knocking out a legendary unless there's actually an in-game way to do that in battles.
Ok that's pretty cool!

Like for example, there was a doubles strategy I ran for a while that involved using a level 1 Mimikyu back in the Sun/Moon days of the competitive and it was NOT a gimmick. It worked reallllly well and was very fun! I love strategizing and team building,
Pokemon's battle system is acutally pretty robust in a competative environment. I bet you have some very interesting stuff cooked up...

so you can bet you're not going to feel disappointed with how battles are going to play out. They're going to feel earned, deserved, and based in actual game mechanics (plus a little bit of anime stuff, but also Z-A reeaaaally changed up the battle system, so I'm mixing everything together and making something that reads well)!
That does sound exciting!

Her goal is to wreck things for the company Quasartico. That does not mean yet literally battling Quasartico and big bads.
Oh. I guess I'm just so used to Pokemon battles with the big bads being an inevitable part of a Pokemon story. It's almost a key element, in fact. Curious how well you can work the ending if it doesn't involve any.

She's WAYYYY more of a menace and more effective at causing problems for Quasartico if she uses new mons in this tournament, this will become more clear over the next few chapters lol. Don't worry, I do explain.
No worries, I now trust you on that.

For anything outside of the Z-A Royale, her Champion team is always on hand and is an option (remember, mobile always accessible boxes are a mechanic now). But for the Z-A Royale?? New mons. Again, if you're not catching on yet, we're gonna get into it later. Drop revealing everything right off the bat is no fun lol, so in this chapter, I'm building the ideas we'll dive into later. Though, you could start to figure it out from the hints I've dropped already, and I've dropped a lot of hints hehehe...
Hmm I have no wasy of knowing if I have picked up on those hints or not.

Absolutely. Please see chapter 3.
Wait... you have Cynthia make an appearence?? :eyes:

For sure!!!! Ghost Trainers and Ghost-types are theater kids and you can't convince me otherwise.
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I think it's a great opportunity for characterization that people often overlook utilizing! Why people pick and bond with Pokemon or have a preference for a certain type, etc, all great character things to explore.
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The XY games are all about life and death, so to emphasize those themes and make them even more apparent in what her original journey would have been (which we will also cover in this fic) and continuing that in Z-A, making Serena a Ghost-type and Dark-type Trainer really was a no brainer.
Interesting.

TBH you'd be surprised!! I myself LOVE cemeteries as does my mom. They're genuinely so fascinating and beautiful.
Urbain should ask her out in a cemetery. :mewlulz:

But yeah, there is a lot of history in a cemetery. I think going to one with someone else would make it more enjoyable. Both people could speculate about the different names, lives, and stuff. Could make for an interesting date.

No, no, they were being that fake that it was sooooooooo obvious to literally anyone and everyone.
Ok, I can accept that. It did seem pretty overt. And it was definitely one of the funniest things I've seen in a Pokemon fic! :mewlulz:

Yes, eventually LMAOOO!! For now, it is a mystery for you because Serena herself does not know. She will always continue on her quest to figure it out.
So I noticed how you didn't respond to any of my speculation regarding the nurses... 😏 You are planning something big involving them and your lack of replies about it is mega sus...

No ✨

Hahaha! Though I did actually already explain why I specifically wouldn't break the chapter here in a previous comment response above, sooooo see above.
I heard your explanation and understand it. My response is to continue to staaaare. 😑

Sableye is the best mon! Also, Sableye can be veryyyy good on a team and competitively!!
Hah, not in the old ruby/sapphire meta. Or at the very least, not in a regular play through. So many other mon outclass it by a ton.

It has a really solid move pool and it's hidden ability, Prankster, is absolutely broken. It compensates for Sableye's slow speed stat by making speed irrelevant. You can shut down your opponent before they can do anything. Sableye is actually pretty bulky and can run either physical or special sets, and has different strats you can run if you play singles or doubles. Sableye got even more play when Megas were introduced in XY/ORAS and became a huge force in the meta. As Mega Sableye, Sableye gets a stats boost and it's ability changes to Magic Bounce, which makes Prankster base Sableye even more of a problem for people to deal with. The Prankster to Magic Bounce combo is wild.
I'm glad modern Pokemon seems to have done Sableye right.

Also, any Pokemon, except hilariously Luvdisc, can be competitively viable in some way/run a good strategy if you try hard enough.
Really? Alright then. Your Caterpie vs my Garchomp. Both max level. :unquag:

He is observant when it comes to overt things, like if someone is uncomfortable from body language. Urbain is a little bit of an empath, but not really a logic guy. He can figure things out and start to pick up on people's behavior the more time he spends with them. Also, Urbain might be an idiot, but he's not stupid -- if that makes sense.
Good to know. Makes sense what you are saying. Part of it is probably me not being used to the character, so thank you for your patience.

Nah, Grimlin was more so rejecting it out of principle,
What principle? The mon goes around stealing jewels! :unquag:

but if he's being offered it and being told it's okay, he really really does want the jewelry more than anything, and that's always gonna win out for him in the end. Grimlin's also not the most morally upstanding little guy haha. Jewelry is one of his top priorities LOL. New friend says it's okay? Great, he's totally past that because look at that ringgggg damn that's a ring. Is essentially what's going on here.
I guess what I am saying is that I wasn't expecting him to reject it at all and instead greedily snatch it up with glee at the first sign it was ok.

Pokemon are characters just as much as Serena or Urbain is, and I will be absolutely treating them as such!! All the Pokemon in this fic are gonna have personalities!
Very good on you for that. Love that about your fic.

Yes~!! I really love writing in 3rd person omnipotent! It gives me a lot of freedom to explore things and characters beat-by-beat as we go... and also make more jokes haha!
Yeah, I do get confused by it sometimes, but I like it and will probably be confused by it less the more of it I read.

Yup!! Though we are gonna get more actual battles soon in chap 4!
That sounds pretty exciting.

I LOVE this scene!!
Good. You should. The knighting ceremony was really cool! :veelove:

I really think you just misread it, that's all! Urbain LOVES getting a gift from her, whatever it may be, the dismay (NOT distain) is not about the Pokemon, it's about the fact that he thought she was blatantly flirting with him to the extent that she was hitting on him actively, got his hopes up REALLY high, and then realized that no, none of that was happening and she was making fun of him. He's dismayed about the fact that Serena was NOT hitting on him NOT the gift hahahaha!
Ok, I think I'm starting to get it. What you are saying is that he thought the gift was Serena showing feelings for him. Her showing feelings for him is more important than the actual gift itself no matter how special the gift may be. Even a shiny Pokemon. And he was dismayed when he found out that the gift wasn't a statement of her feelings at all. Ok. That makes sense. :okgon:

Urbain loves the gift, which I made sure to emphasize with him calling the Ekans "buddy" and saying that they were in the same boat, but he got emotional whiplash from what Serena said accompanying the gift.
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This is different than the hand holding because the hand holding thing was still kinda-cute ish flirting on Serena's part and also wasn't being masked by a joke.
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Like she said explicitly, "if you're gonna be scared, I'll hold your hand," there was no misunderstanding the line, ie there was no way Urbain could get his hopes up and then let down -- it was what it was: banter -- which is different than Serena seemingly actually hitting on him and dropping essentially a pick up line, but then Urbain takes it as a pick up line, gets SO excited about it, then immediately let down that no, it wasn't a pick up line. That's what he's dismayed about, not the gift.
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If anything, I think this instance is SO in character for him and I loveeee this beat lmaooo!! I think you really just read it wrong haha!
Ok, yeah. I read it wrong. Not used to saying that very much but seems to happen often in this fic to me! :unquag:

Moire is coming back!! She also pops up in the DLC for another incredible continuation of this quest, and is the head of the school in game. Love her.
Huh. It seems like you will do well at utilizing characters you establish, then.

Yup, exactly this.
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Ahhhh, no not at allllll lmao. I think you just missed the subtext on this line. This is meant to be a somber line that implies that she still thinks this is all still her fault. That everything that is going on here with Quasartico, who she believes is connected with Flare and the fact that she didn't do good enough wrapping things up lead to the entire state of Lumiose today. This line reinforces her guilt and seeing this as her fault. She's not thinking of five years ago as a success at all. She'd never think that. What happened five years ago scarred her. The version of the "Flare take down" story she gave Grimlin was purposefully a fluff piece that avoided all of the actual things that happened that were important and focused on the part she was willing to talk about while glossing over all of her trauma. Just as Urbain called it, Serena was being dramatic and acting. You'll get parts of the real story soon.
Well, it's good I wasn't correct about that.

I'm curious, but do you ever go back and edit your chapters for anything or are they essentially set in stone once you write them?

Yep, you're right on with all of this! And don't worry, the Serena-AZ parallel is something I've already started setting up since chapter 1 and is going to be a BIG thing throughout this whole fic.
Nice!

Kalos and Lumiose isn't China though, they're France. And the French loveeeeeeeeee revolution, protesting, rebellion, and standing up to authority no matter the cost.
French are people. Chinese are people. People make people societies. Societies are ran by governments. Governments can be corrupt. But culture plays a part in it too. If it didn't, the whole world would be one country instead of many different ones. Fair point.

No one does revolution and protesting like the French, it's literally in their blood. Z-A needed more interjection of this. Like are you kidding me?? Lumiose is Paris, and the people aren't screaming in the streets at the government for every little change?? Pff, no. I completely understand the power dynamics at play in places like China and North Korea, however, those are very very different circumstances and situations. I could write a whole huge like essay long thing about this and go wayyy deep into the China and North Korea examples, because I personally find power dynamics fascinating, but I'm not going to only because this fic is essentially me doing that anyways as we go deeper into it LOL.
Ah, that sounds intriguing. :eyes:

The whole fic is about power dynamics, monitoring, surveillance, and suppression. For example, I'm actively drawing on Michel Foucault (along side other French philosophers and movements) theories of various modes of power, his book Discipline and Punish, to explore that here. Great book by the way, all his work is, Foucault is an excellent philosopher.
I've explored some philosophy, but I will assume you have explored more. But that seems like a pretty cool and useful inspiration for your fic.

Additionally, something you probably won't know because you didn't play the game -- Quasartico isn't evil! They're just trying to do very very poorly done patch jobs in an attempt to help but are really doing something massively illegal by doing so. And the spyware thing is NEVER addressed in the game. Literally never. It's insane.
Oh! Yep, I was under the impression they were evil. But in that case, it seems like your fic perhaps makes them evil because of the spyware they use? Or perhaps that is still one of the things your fic will explore.

A LOT OF SHIT OMFG!!
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See chapter 4 omfg. See chapter 4.
Ok sure. But only with your help. I can't just battle these chapter length hydras for nothing. Sometimes the hero needs support! (And that support comes in the form of the most meaningful currency one author can have for another: reviews!)

Pfffff-- needless? Nahhhhhh.
I think the problem here is that you look for excuses to lengthen chapters while I do the opposite. :unquag:

Stare.

Genuinely so honored you put so much time into this review!
Honored enough to return to my fic? 🙃

You really didn't have to go that hard with the in-depth reactions to everything!!
But it's more special that way. It feels more special to the author. You post your writing because you enjoy feedback. I like to make the feedback special because it creates a more meaningful connection with the other author. You would probably make a good exchange partner and you write and think in ways that intrigue me.

But it made me write a long response to everything you said too lol. It's SO hard to not spoil everything aaaaaaa!!!
Sure, but isn't that one of the best parts of writing a story? Having a reader spend a ton of time thinking about and interacting with you about your work? Hearing the gushing and even defending the bits to correct misconceptions.

I love the smoldering enthusiasm that you have to try hard to contain. That is how a true author should be. An author who feels that way puts in maximum effort and their story will shine because of it.

As I said before, I reallllllly just think you read those two Urbain moments wrong lol. And we are NO WHERE near done with Serena's guilt, and this was NOT a resolution to it. More so, this is the start of that conversation about her guilt. Like I would wrap that whole character beat up in 1 chapter?? Hell no. This is a character study piece for all the characters, we're doing full fleshed-out long arcs for everyone.
Alright alright... :mewlulz:

LOVE that you're really enjoying how the story is playing out so far!!! Serena is a joy to write!! I really do enjoy reading all your reactions to everything!!
Then give me excuses to do more. You've already seen I'll battle the chapter-length choas hydras for you. The first chapter I was already locked in, but the second one I knew what I was coming back to, but did it anyway!

Pokemon can get pretty serious and dark tbh. The plot of Pokemon Y, which I'm explicitly making Serena the protag of, was literally "Team Flare is going to kill all life on the planet except for them to make the world more beautiful in their own image." Team Flare was literally a murder cult.
Good point. Sometimes it's easy to forget that given the cutsy veneer of the series.

They're French!!! OFC we need guillotines!! But also yes, I'm going to be taking the in-game events of XY and Z-A appropriately seriously and addressing what cannon lore and story should've addressed instead of glossing over some of the ramifications on the characters of such really terrible things.
Sounds good.

Grimlin is my favorite too lolololol. I have A LOT of his antics pre-written, and the first Grimlin bit starts in chapter 3 :eyes::eyes::eyes:. He's going to be a problem, but we love him for that.
Sounds

Yep!! There's always randomness! But also, I like the parallel of the idea that Serena is always trying to plan everything, she is hyper too much in her head, over thinks everything, and then there's always something she cannot predict or plan for that surprises her, instinctual and simple -- just like Urbain. The whole thing was also supposed to be a, "the shiny Ekans is like Urbain in many many more ways than just one" thing. 1 in 8,192, indeed.
Ah, yes. Urbain does throw her for a loop. He will say random things and it will catch her totaly off-guard! :mewlulz:

I DID!! This was a treat, and happy holidays!!!
My goodness. These chapters are so long that the replies to replies are longer than standard chapter reviews! 🤣
 
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