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Pokémon Episode “Holy Matrimony” Rewrite: All Rockets Set Free

FanFictioner144

TRio enthusiast
Location
Floaroma Town, setting camp at meadow
Pronouns
him/his/their

Summary​

James has to escape from his fiancée, using all the help he can get from those around:
  • His beloved Growlie, determined to protect him at all costs;
  • Jessie and Meowth, both preparing a questionable scheme to flee; and
  • The twerps, who share the same goal of escaping from Jessebelle.
But there is a catch: James does not plan on leaving Growlie behind this time.

Notes​

One of my more recent stories to feature a Team Rocket episode rewrite.

When it comes to shedding light on James’s past, this episode clearly stands out for building up an impactful backstory. However, the characters around him remained largely underdeveloped, including his Growlie (to whom James waved goodbye unnecessarily) and Ash & company (who didn’t get involved as much in the plot).

Thinking about it, I wrote this fanfiction, aiming to add an extra layer of development for each character. While a few moments from the episode appear in the tale, most of its events are unique to it.


Oh, and there are a few secrets within this story, ranging from musical references to foreign words. Can you find them all?

Single Chapter:​

James had fallen into Jessebelle’s trap, despite all the resistance he offered. And then, after an exhausting cat-mouse chase, he couldn’t do much but drop himself on the ground, his fate right ahead; the more his fiancée laughed, the less he held back his screams.

As James shut his eyes closed, a familiar growl led him to reopen these, rewarding him with the sight of Growlie — his beloved Growlithe — standing by him. Before Jessebelle could get her Vileplume to react, Growlie quickly headbutted James away, carrying him through a window and away from the place.

After some run, James’s eyes met with Team Ash’s and Team Rocket’s not very far ahead. With that, Growlie slowed down abruptly, throwing a still shrieking James a few feet forward.

Jessie was the first to sprint in his aid. “James! Get up, now!” She incited, grabbing his arm and pulling him upwards.

Concurrently, Ash did the same for James’s other arm. “Are you alright?” He asked out of concern.

“Just a little more… ugh.“ James groaned as he got into a sitting position. Mere instants later, he swiftly stood up, gasping for air. “Thank you, thank you!”

“Haha, it was nothing!” Ash laughed.

Growlie swiftly stepped towards its master. “Roow row, Roow!” It cheered with a grin.

James squatted to pat its head. “You’re the best, Growlie,” He praised.

The two of them traded several giggles and wiggles of joy for a good few seconds, while Ash, his friends, Jessie and Meowth observed.

“Guess all’s good when it ends well, ain’t that true?” Meowth chimed in, placing both paws on his hips.

“Chaa.” Pikachu smiled.

“I’m not sure.” Brock shook his head. “It might not be ov-

“Jaaames, look behind you! It’s me~!” A sudden shout from Jessebelle echoed through everyone’s ears.

As everyone gasped in alarm, James and Growlie pulled away from each other. Turning around, they spotted the fiancée and her Vileplume fancily closing in, 10 meters apart from them.

“Leave me alone!” James yelled, backing away.

“Keep movin’!” Meowth panicked.

Each one of them, including Growlie, quickly began running through the grassy field, steering away from the buildings. A few glances back revealed that their pursuers grew more and more distant from them, a small alleviation compared to their limited breath for the run.

“No, my beloved, you are not running properly!” Jessebelle shouted in a high-pitched voice. “Come here, let me teach you the right way!”

“Viile-plumm!” Vileplume added, keeping up with its master.

“Steer away from us, you crazy woman!” Jessie retorted, clenching her fist in the air.

As they ran past a small elevation, however, an iron fence showed itself ahead of them. At that rate, they would be forced to full stop in just a matter of seconds.

“Great, just great!” Misty complained. “We’re trapped in here, while we get chased by a literal maniac!”

“And we can’t run forever, either,” Brock said. “We’ll have to face her soon.”

Upon Brock’s last line, Ash instantly halted his run. “Alright, we’ll show her, Pikachu!” He asserted, turning to face its friend.

“Pika-pikaa!” Pikachu bellowed, quickly turning its narrowed eyes to Jessebelle.

“Wait for me, honey~!” She praised, facing James. “I’m coming for you!”

“Aa-augh!” he shrieked out of despair, placing both hands around his head.

Frowning, Growlie stepped in front of James. “Rrr-row, row!” It barked at Jessebelle.

At the start of the battle, Ash pointed a finger at Vileplume. “Now, Electric Shock!” He commanded Pikachu.

However, a drop of sweat fell from its forehead. “Pii-ka?!” Pikachu uneasily doubted

“That’s our cue, Vileplume!” Jessebelle celebrated, clapping her hands. “Send them to sleep with Sleep Powder!”

“Vileplumm!” Vileplume cheered before releasing a brown powder from its flowery head, aiming at the opposing group.

“Pikachuu!” Ash cried, outstretching his right hand towards his friend.

In a split second, Growlie opened its mouth and barked a beam of fire at the powder. Under the flames, the particles burned right away, falling to the ground as a pile of ash.

“Don’t be a fool, Ash!” Misty yelled. “Electric Shock isn’t an attack!”

“Uhh, sorry, I meant Thunder Shock,” Ash apologized, then turning to face Pikachu. “Let’s try again, buddy! Use Thunder Shock!”

“Ka-pii chu!” Pikachu nodded, electric sparks throbbing from its cheeks.

“Don’t let it get through!” Jessebelle panicked.

“Pii-kaa-chuuuu!” Pikachu shouted, unleashing an electric flow at Vileplume. The resulting impact pushed the enemy backwards, making it ram into Jessebelle.

Gasping, she began sprinting away. “No! It’s not appropriate!” Jessebelle vociferated, shaking her body to let go of Vileplume. “I will call your parents for our own good, dear James! And get that beast away from meeee!”

Growlie howled at her, and then turned to James, waggling its tail. “Rooooow!” It rejoiced in front of him.

“Thank you, my friend.” James smiled.

“Row,” Growlie welcomed with a grin.

Concurrently, Pikachu jumped to Ash’s arms. “Pika-pi!” It cheered.

Ash returned its affection with a soft hug. “You’re the best, Pikac-“

“Jimmy-boy! Get yerself over here now, ‘cause we takin’ off!” Meowth’s voice overlapped Ash’s.

James, Growlie, Ash and his friends turned around, their eyes locking at a hot-air balloon, the burner already turned on. Aboard it were Jessie and Meowth.

“What’s happening?” Misty complained, frowning.

“Ahahah! Don’t you know what ‘planning ahead’ means?” Jessie laughed. “Oh, right, I forgot you twerps don’t do that.”

“What’re ya waitin’ for, Jim?” Meowth called, pulling a burner string to intensify the fire. “It’s either take or leave!”

For a moment, James watched the balloon finally getting off the ground, ascending at a slow speed. Out of the trance, he turned to Growlie. “Follow me, old friend,” He invited before running towards his teammates.

Growlie assented, making short jumps in James’s direction.

Meanwhile, Ash stiffened his posture. “Wait for us!” He demanded, starting a run as well.

With Growlie already on his left hand, James made a jump for it, quickly holding onto the green basket of the balloon. In a quick succession, his Pokémon bounced aboard, allowing him to use his other hand and climb it up — with his teammates’ help.

At that point, Ash halted his run, watching the balloon float out of his reach. “You can’t leave us behind!” He yelled.

“Just how low can you stoop, Team Rocket?” Misty accused.

Jessie raised her hands in the air. “How low?! That almost screams ‘Prepare for trouble’!” She recited.

“And you ought to know, we make it double!” James continued, swinging his arms.

An intangible shout escaped from Ash. “No, you don’t! Pikachu, use Thunderbolt Attack!” He ordered.

The sight of Pikachu’s flashes of electricity made each of the Team Rocket trio gasp, their heartbeats skyrocketing. Nothing could be said or done before…

…before Growlie jumped to the basket edge, throwing a fire stream at the electric barrage. In the end, both attacks collided, making a loud bang before being nullified into nothingness.

“I wasn’t expecting that one,” Jessie commented, staring blankly at Growlie.

“…” James nodded without a word.

“Way to turn the tables, Growly!” Meowth praised before jumping to the edge as well. “Ya seen it, twerps; that’s the wheels fallin’ off for ya!”

“Not so fast!” Ash retorted in an equally loud tone. “Pikachu, give it another sho-“

“Ash, stop!” Brock urged at the last second. “Attacking them won’t help us here. Let them go; we’ll…”

However, Jessie, James and Meowth could no longer listen to their nemeses, given the increasing distance between them. That meant the twerps no longer posed a threat...

No, wait! Jessebelle no longer posed a threat to them. What a pain reliever! No more mad woman trying to take James away by force! Plus, with his beloved Growlie aboard the Team Rocket balloon, he felt like the most euphoric one from the quartet. Nothing could take his joy away!

“Woo-hoo, we made it!” James triumphed, his eyes glinting with happiness.

“Woah! I’ve never seen you so eager, James!” Jessie exclaimed with a soft smile.

“Thank you!” James returned an even larger grin.

Smiling at its master’s happiness, Growlie nudged his boot. “Row roow!” It contributed to the joyful atmosphere.

James tilted his head to look at the Pokémon. “Growlie…” He began, his smile fading away. “You left home to stay with me. Don’t you miss your old life?”

Growlie stood slightly higher. “Row?! Roow, row row ro-oow Roow!” It barked in a determined tone, pointing a paw at its master.

“Hahah, I kinda figured that out!” James laughed, squatting to look at his friend face to face.

As the two of them giggled, Meowth placed both paws on his hips. “Ahem, as if Jimmy’s mushy feelings wer-“

Jessie swiftly moved her shoe to block his mouth. “Quiet, you!” She demanded, soon retracting her leg.

In a moment, Meowth’s cheeks turned slightly green, his head spinning dizzily.

Meanwhile, James shrugged at the scene. “Anyway, friend. Since we’re now together, would you accept me as your trainer?” He offered, moving a hand to his pocket to grab a Poké Ball.

Growlie tilted its head at the object, then backing away from it. “Rrow?” It doubted.

“Don’t worry, it’s just a Poké Ball,” James explained. “It won’t hurt you.”

“Rowww!” Growlie dissented with a shake of its head.

From the sideline, Meowth — already back to normal — stepped in. “Hey, dontcha’ see he ain’t gonna let no sphere trap ‘im in?” He snarled, folding his arms. “He’s got a sense o’ pride just like me, n’ nuttin’s gonna take these two wild Pokémon’ freedom away!”

James slowly returned the Poké Ball to his pocket. “Oh, I’m sorry,” He apologized.

Snorting, Jessie came closer. “Where has your eagerness gone, James?” She questioned. “Come on, make this your day!”

“Yeah, I got it,” James stated, returning his look at Growlie. “It’s not everyday that we get a new friend… and I couldn’t leave you behind after what Jessebelle said about you.”

“Row,” Growlie cheered, a grin rebuilding itself at its face.

“So… welcome to the team, friend!” James greeted.

Growlie jumped out of excitement, cheering at its new friends. A few woofs of joy escaped from its mouth as it rounded the trio several times.

Amidst the eagerness, Meowth giggled along. “Who woulda’ thought we’d survive a literal nightmare n’ get the better of the twerps, all the same..-“ He chimed in, although a pause turned his face paler. “Oh, naw! We forgot the golden prize, Pikachu!”

James winced. “I’m fine with that. Anything over getting married with her.”

“Y’er kiddin’, right?” Meowth complained further. “We got a reputation to seal! We gotta U-turn n’ make our way back to the twerps! What’re ya waitin’ for? C’mon, no time to waste in this…”

As Meowth spoke, Jessie directed a smirk at James. “Are you thinking the same?” She asked in a whisper.

“No doubt.” James returned the smirk.

“Huh?! What’s that strange look in yer eyes?” Meowth interrogated, a few drops of sweat falling down his face.

In a whoosh, Jessie and James advanced to grab Meowth’s arms, lifting him up and towards the balloon edge.

“Naw! Youse can’t yeet me out like that! We’re a team!” Meowth screamed, squirming under their grasp. “Look, I-I’m sorry for all I mighta’ said-”

“See you later!” Jessie and James declared in unison, throwing Meowth away from the balloon.

Screaming, he looked down to see a sparse forest several meters below and nearing. “Meow, not the price I get paid for doin’ my comic relief! I demand better job security!” He panicked, swinging his arms all around. “Looks like Meowth’s blastin’ off agaaain!”

Watching him fall, Jessie placed both hands on her hips. “Ha! Let that teach him a lesson!” She gloated.

James, on the other hand, glanced a frowning Growlie, who in turn nodded in understanding. After thanking it with a soft smile, he turned to look at his partner. “I can’t believe that he was fine going back there!” He cried.

“No, in no world would we return to that estate of yours,” Jessie claimed, turning her hair around. “Our freedom goes beyond their money.”

“You know what that means, right?” James asked, extending his hand towards her. “Double trouble time, Jessie.”

A smirk formed on Jessie’s lips as she unfolded her arms. “Sounds great to me, James.” She took his hand.

The duo held hands in a gentle, yet firm, grip, giggling at each other’s presence. After all, rejoicing at their freedom not only gave them purpose, but also strengthened their camaraderie. For all Jessie and James knew, they were promised a long, though rewarding, journey from which they could only win in their hearts.

Watching the duo, Growlie began wowing to the skies, letting out many long, low-pitched noises of appreciation.

••••••••••

Ash and his friends stood outside of the estate gate, while Jessebelle and butler Hopkins worked to lock it.

“You are no longer welcome around our estate,” Hopkins declared with his megaphone. “Now go away and never come back!”

Frowning, Ash and his friends walked away from the gate. Each of them (except Pikachu, who simply shut its eyes) had their hands covering their ears.

“How could you let my beloved James escape from me!?” Jessebelle complained, tears falling down her eyes. “I can’t stand people like you! Go, go! And I’ll remind you, that’s not the right way of walking away from a lady!”

A few seconds later, Ash, Misty and Brock uncovered their ears, their distance from Jessebelle and Hopkins far enough to allow them a relieved breath.

However, the situation was in no sense alright; Jessie, James and Meowth had earlier left Ash and his friends behind, forcing them to wait until eventually being expelled from the estate. Listening to the complaints from James’s family wore out the young trainers completely.

“Ugh, Team Rocket had to leave us hanging at the worst moment!” Misty scolded, clenching her fist.

“I know, right? They’re simply the worst!” Ash added.

“Chu,” Pikachu snorted, its eyes narrowed.

On the other side, Brock’s posture remained composed. “Hmm… it’s still kinda weird that James had everything — money, stability, a family,” He pondered, “but he chose Team Rocket over all that.

Ash tilted his head. “How’s that any strange?” He questioned. “He was just a coward who wasted a rich life!”

“I don’t think money mattered to him,” Brock replied, shaking his head. “If anything, he sought freedom from a strict life. And he found it in Team Rocket, with Jessie and Meowth.”

“Hmph! Even so, picking a life of crime was a horrible decision!” Misty asserted. “He should’ve known better to pick something else.”

With that, the young trainers quieted down and carried on their journey, with Pikachu silently following from behind. Even though Team Rocket stayed true to their evil nature, James’s past shed light on his current life. And while Ash and his friends could care less about them, they learned that every villain had their beginnings.

So what about Jessie’s and Meowth’s origins?
 

Tango

Creator of the Doduo Alliance
Location
Somewhere beyond the Nexus
Pronouns
He/him
Partners
  1. doduo

Episode “Holy Matrimony” Rewrite: All Rockets Set Free​

And I'm back for another review!

Well, based on the title, it seems this will be about marraige setting Team Rocket free. Curious to see how that will go.

Summary​

James has to escape from his fiancée, using all the help he can get from those around:
  • His beloved Growlie, determined to protect him at all costs;
  • Jessie and Meowth, both preparing a questionable scheme to flee; and
  • The twerps, who share the same goal of escaping from Jessebelle.
But there is a catch: James does not plan on leaving Growlie behind this time.
This seems like an interesting premise. I wonder what it will entail?

Notes​

One of my more recent stories to feature a Team Rocket episode rewrite.
This is one of the most backstory-heavy episodes to pick from for Team Rocket. Very good choice of episode!

When it comes to shedding light on James’s past, this episode clearly stands out for building up an impactful backstory. However, the characters around him remained largely underdeveloped, including his Growlie (to whom James waved goodbye unnecessarily) and Ash & company (who didn’t get involved as much in the plot).

Thinking about it, I wrote this fanfiction, aiming to add an extra layer of development for each character. While a few moments from the episode appear in the tale, most of its events are unique to it.
Sounds like you did a bit of creative flexing in this. I'll be curious to see where you take things.

Oh, and there are a few secrets within this story, ranging from musical references to foreign words. Can you find them all?
Honestly, I don't have much faith in myself to recognize those kinds of things but who knows? Maybe I'll find one.

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James had fallen fell into Jessebelle’s trap, despite all the his resistance he offered. And then, After an exhausting cat-mouse chase, he finally fell couldn’t do much but drop himself on to the ground, his fate right ahead; the more his fiancée laughed, the less he held back his screams.

As James shut his eyes closed, a familiar growl led him to reopen these them, rewarding him with the sight of Growlie — his beloved Growlithe — standing by him. Before Jessebelle could get her Vileplume to react, Growlie quickly headbutted James away, carrying him through a window and away from the place.
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Took out away because the sentence did fine without it and also because there was another one later in the same sentence.

Also, I thought Growlie headbutted him? How does a headbutt allow Growlie to carry James? Maybe instead of 'carry' you could use 'sending'. Also, is the window open or closed? If it's open then you could use 'crashing'.

After some running a while, James’s eyes met with Team Ash’s and Team Rocket’s not very far ahead. With that, Growlie slowed down abruptly, throwing a still-shrieking James a few feet forward.
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Huh... so Growlie really was carrying him? What did he do, bite onto his clothes? I'm surprised Growlie is big enough for that if so... (but maybe that happened in the anime and I just can't remember how big Growlie was)

Jessie was the first to sprint in his aid. “James! Get up, now!” She incited, grabbing his arm and pulling him upwards.

Concurrently, Ash did the same for James’s other arm. “Are you alright?” He asked out of with concern.

“Just a little more… ugh.“ James groaned as he and sat down got into a sitting position. Mere instants later, he swiftly stood sprang to his feet up, gasping for air. “Thank you, thank you!”
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Also, what's up with him gasping for air? If Growlie was carrying him, he shouldn't be out of breath...

“Haha, it was nothing!” Ash laughed.

Growlie swiftly stepped towards its master. “Roow row, Roow!” It cheered with a grin.

James squatted to pat its head. “You’re the best, Growlie,” He praised.

The two of them traded several giggles and wiggles moments of joy for a good few seconds, while Ash, his friends, Jessie and Meowth everyone else observed.
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“Guess all’s good when it ends well, ain’t that true?” Meowth chimed in, placing both paws on his hips.

“Chaa.” Pikachu smiled.

“I’m not sure.” Brock shook his head. “It might not be ov-

“Jaaames, look behind you! It’s me~!” A sudden shout from Jessebelle echoed through everyone’s ears.
James is an odd guy. Rich lifestyle and a reasonably attractive girl but he would rather permanently rough it and fail at crime. :unquag:

I kind of doubt Jessebelle was bad enough to warrant such lengths to avoid her...

As everyone gasped in alarm,
should be period at the end.

James and Growlie pulled away from each other. Turning around, they spotted the fiancée and her Vileplume fancily closing in, 10 ten meters apart from them.

“Leave me alone!” James yelled, backing away.

“Keep movin’!” Meowth panicked.

Each one of them, including Growlie, quickly began running All of them ran through the grassy field, steering away from the buildings. A few glances back revealed that their pursuers grew more and more distant from them, a small alleviation considering they were running out of compared to their limited breath. for the run.

“No, my beloved, you are not running properly!” Jessebelle shouted in a high-pitched voice. “Come here, let me teach you the right way!”
Funny thing is that she is only trying to teach those things to him because I think she considers it helping him. She actually seems to care about him underneath it.

“Viile-plumm!” Vileplume added, keeping up with its master.

“Steer away from us, you crazy woman!” Jessie retorted, clenching her fist in the air.
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Jessie is calling her crazy? At least Jessebelle doesn't fail to capture Pikachu every single episode only to have an explosive failure that launches her miles into the sky before she somehow survives and is back the next episode to do it all again... :unquag:

But when I put it that way, it also makes Team Rocket seem pretty awesome. More awesome than crazy. It would be more crazy if they ever had any permanent injury from it, but they always come out unscathed.

As they ran up a small hill past a small elevation, however, an iron fence showed itself loomed ahead of them. At that rate, They would be forced to full stop in mere just a matter of seconds.

“Great, just great!” Misty complained. “We’re trapped in here, while we get chased by a literal maniac!”
You mean like what happens to you pretty much every episode when Team Rocket tries to capture Pikachu?

“And we can’t run forever, either,” Brock said. “We’ll have to face her soon.”
Actually, Brock, you CAN run forever. All of you are already doing it anyway. It's called a Pokemon journey. She doesn't even know how many badges Ash has, so even if she tried camping at a gym to catch them, she might be at the wrong one! It's a big world.

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Upon Brock’s last line, Ash instantly halted his run. “Alright, we’ll show her, Pikachu!” He asserted, turning to face its friend.
Hmm but what is that supposed to accomplish, I wonder? Is he hoping Pikachu's cuteness will distract her? Unlikely...

“Pika-pikaa!” Pikachu bellowed, quickly turning its narrowed eyes to Jessebelle.

“Wait for me, honey~!” She praised, facing James. “I’m coming for you!”

“Aa-augh!” he shrieked out of despair, placing both hands around his head.

Frowning, Growlie stepped in front of James. “Rrr-row, row!” It barked at Jessebelle.

At the start of the battle, Ash pointed a finger at Vileplume. “Now, Electric Shock!” He commanded Pikachu.
Don't you mean thundershock? I can't remember if he ever commanded Pikachu to use "Electric Shock" since that is not an actual attack in the Pokemon games and I think all the attacks in the anime are based on the attacks in the games (I might be misremembering though...)

However, a drop of sweat fell from its forehead. “Pii-ka?!” Pikachu uneasily doubted
Hmm Pikachu seems to understand this might not be the time to have a battle.

“That’s our cue, Vileplume!” Jessebelle celebrated, clapping her hands. “Send them to sleep with Sleep Powder!”

“Vileplumm!” Vileplume cheered before releasing a brown powder from its flowery head, aiming at the opposing group.
That's an issue. Stuff like that is how one wakes up chained in someone's basement! :copyka:

“Pikachuu!” Ash cried, outstretching his right hand towards his friend.

In a split second, Growlie opened its mouth and barked a beam of fire at the powder. Under the flames, the particles burned right away, falling to the ground as a pile of ash.
Thank goodness for Growlie!

“Don’t be a fool, Ash!” Misty yelled. “Electric Shock isn’t an attack!”
Ah so you ARE aware! :mewlulz: Good. You had me worried there for a moment.

Oh, so that's what Pikachu was confused about!

Would Ash really make that kind of mistake though? Maybe it happened in the episode that way and I forgot.

“Uhh, sorry, I meant Thunder Shock,” Ash apologized, then turning to face Pikachu. “Let’s try again, buddy! Use Thunder Shock!”
Hmm... Maybe it would make more sense if Jessebelle made the first attack and Ash commands Pikachu wrong in a panic since he knew sleep powder was extremely scary to them all? But If this part was in the episode, I can't fault you for that.

“Ka-pii chu!” Pikachu nodded, electric sparks throbbing from its cheeks.

“Don’t let it get through!” Jessebelle panicked.

“Pii-kaa-chuuuu!” Pikachu shouted, unleashing an electric flow at Vileplume. The resulting impact pushed the enemy backwards, making it ram ramming it into Jessebelle.

Gasping, she began sprinting away. “No! It’s not appropriate!” Jessebelle vociferated,
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Ok, so vociferated is certainly a unique word to use, but I had no idea what it meant and had never heard it before. I had to look it up and I imagine 99% of your readers will too. This might be too clever of a word. You can keep it if you want, but it might work better for readers if you shifted it to something like 'argued'.

shaking her body to let go of Vileplume.
This line is kind of confusing to me. It might make more sense if it were switched to:

"while lightly shoving Vileplume away."

“I will call your parents for our own good
For our own good? Did you mean to say for your own good?

, dear James! And get that beast away from meeee!”

Growlie howled at her,
Howled at her? Wouldn't a bark or a growl be more appropriate? Howls are something I usually anticipate when an owner leaves for the day or when the dog is alone.

and then turned to James, waggling its tail. “Rooooow!” It rejoiced in front of him.
Underlined words have an extra space in between them.

“Thank you, my friend.” James smiled.

“Row,” Growlie welcomed with a grin.

Concurrently, Pikachu jumped to Ash’s arms. “Pika-pi!” It cheered.

Ash returned its affection with a soft hug. “You’re the best, Pikac-“

“Jimmy-boy! Get yerself over here now, ‘cause we takin’ off!” Meowth’s voice overlapped Ash’s.

James, Growlie, Ash and his friends turned around, their eyes locking at a hot-air balloon, the burner already turned on. Aboard it were Jessie and Meowth.

“What’s happening?” Misty complained, frowning.
Yep. Misty knows the drill. The balloon comes out and stuff hits the fan.

“Ahahah! Don’t you know what ‘planning ahead’ means?” Jessie laughed. “Oh, right, I forgot you twerps don’t do that.”
I mean... she's not wrong... :mewlulz:

“What’re ya waitin’ for, Jim?” Meowth called, pulling a burner string to intensify the fire. “It’s either take or leave!”

For a moment, James watched the balloon finally getting off the ground, ascending at a slow speed. Out of the trance, he turned to Growlie. “Follow me, old friend,” He invited before running towards his teammates.

Growlie assented, making short jumps in James’s direction.

Meanwhile, Ash stiffened his posture. “Wait for us!” He demanded, starting a run as well.

With Growlie already on his left hand, James made a jump for it, quickly holding onto the green basket of the balloon. In a quick succession, his Pokémon bounced aboard, allowing him to use his other hand and climb it up — with his teammates’ help.

At that point, Ash halted his run, watching the balloon float out of his reach. “You can’t leave us behind!” He yelled.

“Just how low can you stoop, Team Rocket?” Misty accused.
Misty, why does it matter? Jessebelle is after James. Not the rest of you...

Jessie raised her hands in the air. “How low?! That almost screams ‘Prepare for trouble’!” She recited.

“And you ought to know, we make it double!” James continued, swinging his arms.

An intangible shout escaped from Ash. “No, you don’t! Pikachu, use Thunderbolt Attack!” He ordered.
Not even going to let them finish their motto, huh? Fair.

The sight of Pikachu’s flashes of electricity made each of the Team Rocket trio gasp, their heartbeats skyrocketinged.
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Nothing could be said or done before…

…before Growlie jumped to the basket edge, throwing a fire stream at the electric barrage. In the end, both attacks collided, making a loud bang and before being nullified into nothingness.
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“I wasn’t expecting that one,” Jessie commented, staring blankly at Growlie.

“…” James nodded without a word.

“Way to turn the tables, Growly!” Meowth praised before jumping to the edge as well. “Ya seen it, twerps; that’s the wheels fallin’ off for ya!”

“Not so fast!” Ash retorted in an equally loud tone. “Pikachu, give it another sho-“

“Ash, stop!” Brock urged at the last second. “Attacking them won’t help us here. Let them go; we’ll…”
I like how Brock steps in as an authoritative voice of reason/mentor-like figure. This is part of why we like Brock and not Tracey aka 'the creature'.

However, Jessie, James and Meowth Team Rocket could no longer listen to hear their nemeses, given the increasing distance between them. That also meant they were out of attack range the twerps no longer posed a threat...
Edit suggestion - audience should be well aware that Team Rocket is comprised of Jessie, James, and Meowth, so you can cut down on words a little here.

No, wait! Jessebelle no longer posed a threat to them.
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What a pain reliefver!
What a pain reliever? This is the kind of phrase I expect would only be used someone who doesn't have English as a primary language. The jarring levels for it are completely off the charts! The phrase you are looking for here is "What a relief". If something like this were to somehow pop up in my own writing it would be the most embarrassing type of error I could possibly write.

The good news? This is extremely simple to fix and you seem to almost never make these kinds of errors.

No more mad woman trying to take James away by force! Plus, James was reunited with his beloved Growlie. aboard the Team Rocket balloon, he felt like the most euphoric one from the quartet. Nothing could take his joy away!
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“Woo-hoo, we made it!” James triumphed, his eyes glinting with happiness.

“Woah! I’ve never seen you so eager, James!” Jessie exclaimed with a soft smile.

“Thank you!” James returned an even larger grin.

Smiling at its master’s happiness, Growlie nudged his boot. “Row roow!” It contributed to the joyful atmosphere.

James tilted his head to look at the Pokémon. “Growlie…” He began, his smile fading away. “You left home to stay with me. Don’t you miss your old life?”

Growlie stood slightly higher. “Row?! Roow, row row ro-oow Roow!” It barked in a determined tone, pointing a paw at its master.

“Hahah, I kinda figured that out!” James laughed, squatting to look at his friend face to face.
I'm pretty surprised the show didn't use this as an opportunity to give James another Pokemon. I enjoy the interaction between James and Growlie. And honestly this episode was probably one of the best in the early series. Anything that gave Team Rocket some backstory was great.

As the two of them giggled, Meowth placed both paws on his hips. “Ahem, as if Jimmy’s mushy feelings wer-“

Jessie swiftly moved her shoe to block his mouth. “Quiet, you!” She demanded, soon retracting her leg.

In a moment, Meowth’s cheeks turned slightly green, his head spinning dizzily.
Meowth's reaction was a bit much here. Did Jessie have some Pokemon dung on the bottom of her shoe or something?

But this is a nice moment for Jessie and shows that she cares about James' happiness. I do think she is the best shipping partner for James.

Meanwhile, James shrugged at the scene. “Anyway, friend. Since we’re now together, would you accept me as your trainer?” He offered, moving a hand to his pocket to grab a Poké Ball.

Growlie tilted its head at the object, then backing away from it. “Rrow?” It doubted.

“Don’t worry, it’s just a Poké Ball,” James explained. “It won’t hurt you.”

“Rowww!” Growlie dissented with a shake of its head.

From the sideline, Meowth — already back to normal — stepped in. “Hey, dontcha’ see he ain’t gonna let no sphere trap ‘im in?” He snarled, folding his arms. “He’s got a sense o’ pride just like me, n’ nuttin’s gonna take these two wild Pokémon’ freedom away!”
Huh. I'm not really sure he would even need a Pokeball for Growlie with how loyal he already is.

James slowly returned the Poké Ball to his pocket. “Oh, I’m sorry,” He apologized.

Snorting, Jessie came closer. “Where has your eagerness gone, James?” She questioned. “Come on, make this your day!”

“Yeah, I got it,” James stated, returning his look at Growlie. “It’s not everyday that we get a new friend… and I couldn’t leave you behind after what Jessebelle said about you.”

“Row,” Growlie cheered, a grin rebuilding itself at its face.

“So… welcome to the team, friend!” James greeted.
Poor Growlie... he deserves better than a life of crime... even if he is adorable and I'm happy for James.

Growlie jumped out of excitement, cheering at its new friends. A few woofs of joy escaped from its mouth as it rounded the trio several times.

Amidst the eagerness, Meowth giggled along. “Who woulda’ thought we’d survive a literal nightmare n’ get the better of the twerps, all the same..-“ He chimed in, although a pause turned his face paler. “Oh, naw! We forgot the golden prize, Pikachu!”

James winced. “I’m fine with that. Anything over getting married with her.”

“Y’er kiddin’, right?” Meowth complained further. “We got a reputation to seal! We gotta U-turn n’ make our way back to the twerps! What’re ya waitin’ for? C’mon, no time to waste in this…”

As Meowth spoke, Jessie directed a smirk at James. “Are you thinking the same?” She asked in a whisper.

“No doubt.” James returned the smirk.

“Huh?! What’s that strange look in yer eyes?” Meowth interrogated, a few drops of sweat falling down his face.

In a whoosh, Jessie and James advanced to grab Meowth’s arms, lifting him up and towards the balloon edge.

“Naw! Youse can’t yeet me out like that! We’re a team!” Meowth screamed, squirming under their grasp. “Look, I-I’m sorry for all I mighta’ said-”

“See you later!” Jessie and James declared in unison, throwing Meowth away from the balloon.
Whaaaaat? How did both of them have that idea at the same time? Why would they? A talking Meowth is very useful for communicating with other Pokemon at the very least!

Screaming, he looked down to see a sparse forest several meters below and nearing. “Meow, not the price I get paid for doin’ my comic relief! I demand better job security!” He panicked, swinging his arms all around. “Looks like Meowth’s blastin’ off agaaain!”
I do like this funny bit you added. I can't remember if it was in the show, but it sounds fitting enough to have been in it! :mewlulz:

Watching him fall, Jessie placed both hands on her hips. “Ha! Let that teach him a lesson!” She gloated.
A lesson for what? Wanting to go back after Pikachu? You both could have told him no or tied him up or something...

James, on the other hand, glanced at a frowning Growlie,
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who in turn nodded in understanding. After thanking it with a soft smile, he turned to look at his partner. “I can’t believe that he was fine going back there!” He cried.

No, In no world would we return to that estate of yours,” Jessie claimed, turning her hair around. “Our freedom goes beyond their money or Pikachu.”
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“You know what that means, right?” James asked, extending his hand towards her. “Double trouble time, Jessie.”

A smirk formed on Jessie’s lips as she unfolded her arms. “Sounds great to me, James.” She took his hand.

The duo held hands in a gentle, yet firm, grip, giggling at each other’s presence. After all, rejoicing at their freedom not only gave them purpose, but also strengthened their camaraderie. For all Jessie and James knew, they were promised a long, though rewarding, journey from which they could only win in their hearts.
Camaraderie... after they literally just dumped a member of their team overboard... right...

Watching the duo, Growlie began wowing to the skies, letting out many long, low-pitched noises of appreciation.
wowing? Do you mean howling?

••••••••••

Ash and his friends stood outside of the estate gate, while Jessebelle and butler Hopkins worked to lock it.

“You are no longer welcome around our estate,” Hopkins declared with his megaphone. “Now go away and never come back!”
Hey, that means they were welcome before!

Frowning, Ash and his friends walked away from the gate. Each of them (except Pikachu, who simply shut its eyes) had their hands covering their ears.

“How could you let my beloved James escape from me!?” Jessebelle complained, tears falling down her eyes. “I can’t stand people like you! Go, go! And I’ll remind you, that’s not the right way of walking away from a lady!”

A few seconds later, Ash, Misty and Brock uncovered their ears, their distance from Jessebelle and Hopkins far enough to allow them a relieved breath.

However, the situation was in no sense alright; Jessie, James and Meowth had earlier left Ash and his friends behind, forcing them to wait until eventually being expelled from the estate. Listening to the complaints from James’s family wore out the young trainers completely.
Eh, they'l get over it. Either way it's better than what Team Rocket deals with on a regular basis of being blasted off.

“Ugh, Team Rocket had to leave us hanging at the worst moment!” Misty scolded, clenching her fist.

“I know, right? They’re simply the worst!” Ash added.

“Chu,” Pikachu snorted, its eyes narrowed.

On the other side, Brock’s posture remained composed. “Hmm… it’s still kinda weird that James had everything — money, stability, a family,” He pondered, “but he chose Team Rocket over all that.
Honestly, Brock is right.

Ash tilted his head. “How’s that any strange?” He questioned. “He was just a coward who wasted a rich life!”

“I don’t think money mattered to him,” Brock replied, shaking his head. “If anything, he sought freedom from a strict life. And he found it in Team Rocket, with Jessie and Meowth.”
Yeah, but it still was a dumb choice unless he ends up as Jessie's romantic partner.

“Hmph! Even so, picking a life of crime was a horrible decision!” Misty asserted. “He should’ve known better to pick something else.”
Ultimately what's important is that the choices one makes in life lead to the happiest life they can acheive. Typically, one also wants to avoid immorality to achieve that, but James was ok with crime...

With that, the young trainers quieted down and carried on their journey, with Pikachu silently following from behind. Even though Team Rocket stayed true to their evil nature, James’s past shed light on his current life. And while Ash and his friends could care less about them, they learned that every villain had their beginnings.
So I guess you added Growlithe as a cannon partner and Meowth maybe died from the fall? (But who am I kidding, he most certainly survived it. Team Rocket are invinicible.)

So what about Jessie’s and Meowth’s origins?
I take it to mean you did rewrites for their episodes too?

Closing thoughts:
An interesting what-if take on an interesting episode. I'm still a bit surprised they backstabbed Meowth and had the gall to talk about comraderie immedately after. Not saying goodbye to Growlie was the best part, of course. So, I'm not sure if I discovered any of the 'secrets' but maybe you can tell me if I did on accident. Regardless, I like the ideas you have for your fics. The way you write Meowth is especially on point. Looking forward to the next read!
 

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Hello again! Now reviewing [the review you left] for my work.

This is one of the most backstory-heavy episodes to pick from for Team Rocket. Very good choice of episode!
Much obliged.
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I disagree with "despite all the his resistance he offered" (stylistic option). For the other ones, though, I adapted as you suggested.
How does a headbutt allow Growlie to carry James?
Growlie has remarkable strength. Especially around its best friend, James. Plus, it happened in the original episode, so I adapted from it.
Also, what's up with him gasping for air?
The effort he put into getting up. For this one, I did a real-life experiment. I ended up doing a small gasp for air once I got up.
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I will adapt the sentence I wrote, albeit not in the way you suggested. Nonetheless, I appreciate your ideas.
I kind of doubt Jessebelle was bad enough to warrant such lengths to avoid her
About that... one sec.
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Whatever this is, Jessebelle used to [play with James] in this room. Therefore, him running away was not [that absurd] of a scenario.
Funny thing is that she is only trying to teach those things to him because I think she considers it helping him. She actually seems to care about him underneath it.
That is one angle many authors like to explore. On the other hand, I do not.
At least Jessebelle doesn't fail to capture Pikachu every single episode only to have an explosive failure that launches her miles into the sky before she somehow survives and is back the next episode to do it all again
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Actually, Brock, you CAN run forever. All of you are already doing it anyway
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But actually, they are trapped inside the property. It might not have occurred to them that they could jump it, had they used their Pokémon.
they never realize in other episodes
I can't remember if he ever commanded Pikachu to use "Electric Shock"
Actually, it was a dubbing mistake. I wrote this whole section to play around Ash’s “Electric Shock!”
Pikachu knows it's not an attack, hence its surprised reaction.
That's an issue. Stuff like that is how one wakes up chained in someone's basement
Just here to say a "YES!"
But If this part was in the episode, I can't fault you for that
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Ok, so vociferated is certainly a unique word to use, but I had no idea what it meant and had never heard it before
Thank you for the remark. Changing it to something more [understandable].
totally me using a latin word because my language comes from latin
For our own good? Did you mean to say for your own good?
Both would work, actually. I chose this one because it implies Jessebelle still sees them in a relationship.
Yep. Misty knows the drill. The balloon comes out and stuff hits the fan
Misty is the skeptical one, after all.
Misty, why does it matter? Jessebelle is after James. Not the rest of you
Foreshadowing.
I like how Brock steps in as an authoritative voice of reason/mentor-like figure. This is part of why we like Brock and not Tracey aka 'the creature'
Firstly, Brock forever.
Secondly, who is Tracey? :unquag:
This is the kind of phrase I expect would only be used someone who doesn't have English as a primary language
So you've found out. Well done, Mr. Tango. Well done.
I'm pretty surprised the show didn't use this as an opportunity to give James another Pokemon. I enjoy the interaction between James and Growlie
The main motivation I had to write this story. Growlie and James had such a great synergy. Glad another person shares my opinion.
Meowth's reaction was a bit much here
Comedy is not my strong suit. I still try to insert it, nevertheless.
Huh. I'm not really sure he would even need a Pokeball for Growlie with how loyal he already is
The show loves to use Pokéballs, even when the Pokémon might downright refuse "captivity". Ash also tried this with Pikachu.
Poor Growlie... he deserves better than a life of crime... even if he is adorable and I'm happy for James
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Whaaaaat? How did both of them have that idea at the same time? Why would they
In the earlier series, Jessie and James shared a disdain for Meowth. I did not believe it as well, until I rewatched the OS.
I do like this funny bit you added. I can't remember if it was in the show, but it sounds fitting enough to have been in it!
Something similar, actually. Jessie and James genuinely forgot Meowth, who scurried after them.
Camaraderie... after they literally just dumped a member of their team overboard
I mean, they gotta be evil, somehow.
my first tale ending with TR being evil
Hey, that means they were welcome before
Actually, they were :wowzard:
Honestly, Brock is right
Yeah.
Ultimately what's important is that the choices one makes in life lead to the happiest life they can acheive. Typically, one also wants to avoid immorality to achieve that, but James was ok with crime
If only Team Rocket shared this kind of reflection... before trying to steal Pikachu.
So I guess you added Growlithe as a cannon partner and Meowth maybe died from the fall
Yes and no. Meowth is meant to return. Jessie and James will be waiting for him :copyka:
I take it to mean you did rewrites for their episodes too?
I will someday. Thank you for mentioning.

Woah! That was a long run of writing. As always, I say I appreciate your reviews.
Until the next time!
 
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Hello again! Now reviewing [the review you left] for my work.
A few loose ends so I shall reply once more!

Growlie has remarkable strength. Especially around its best friend, James. Plus, it happened in the original episode, so I adapted from it.
Very good then. No worries. Anything in the original episode is totally fair to keep.

The effort he put into getting up. For this one, I did a real-life experiment. I ended up doing a small gasp for air once I got up.
In that case, carry on!

I will adapt the sentence I wrote, albeit not in the way you suggested. Nonetheless, I appreciate your ideas.
Glad to be of help.

About that... one sec.
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Whatever this is, Jessebelle used to [play with James] in this room. Therefore, him running away was not [that absurd] of a scenario.
You know, I totally forgot it was like this. I'm pretty sure this is EXACTLY where they all would have woke up if Vileplume put them all to sleep! :copyka:

That is one angle many authors like to explore. On the other hand, I do not.
Given the picture above, I can't really say I blame you... :mewlulz:

But actually, they are trapped inside the property. It might not have occurred to them that they could jump it, had they used their Pokémon.
they never realize in other episodes
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Actually, Ash did. I wrote this whole section to play around his stupidity.
Pikachu knows it's not an attack, hence its surprised reaction.
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So you've found out. Well done, Mr. Tango. Well done.
Please for the sake of my own sanity, please tell me this butchery of the English language will be fixed! :copyka:

Comedy is not my strong suit. I still try to insert it, nevertheless.
Fair.

The show loves to use Pokéballs, even when the Pokémon might downright refuse "captivity". Ash also tried this with Pikachu.
True.

In the earlier series, Jessie and James shared a disdain for Meowth. I did not believe it as well, until I rewatched the OS.
Its been a little while since I last saw it. Thanks for the reminder.

Something similar, actually. Jessie and James genuinely forgot Meowth, who scurried after them.
Ah that makes sense.

I mean, they gotta be evil, somehow.
my first tale ending with TR being evil
True.

Yes and no. Meowth is meant to return. Jessie and James will be waiting for him :copyka:
In typical status-quo fashion.

I will someday. Thank you for mentioning.
Nice! I look forward to seeing what you cook up someday.

Woah! That was a long run of writing. As always, I say I appreciate your reviews.
Until the next time!
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