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Part Seven

canisaries

you should've known the price of evil
Location
Stovokor
Pronouns
she/her
Partners
  1. inkay-shirlee
  2. houndoom-elliot
  3. yamask-joanna
  4. shuppet
  5. deerling-andre
hi all! here we are again, a few months after the last chapter. i don't know, though, if the next one will take as long, as i actually do have the outline finished by now and should know what to write. well, i guess we'll see!

this chapter is rated teen for non-violent death. enjoy!

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Part Seven

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Nella’s blood turned to ice. She froze where she stood.

“Hm?” The older noivern stopped and turned to her. “What’s wrong?”

Nella took a while to consider her next action. She was with cultists. She didn’t know what they had planned for her nor what they would do if she tried to flee. Flee… fleeing felt like the wrong solution, or no solution at all. She couldn’t fly anywhere in this storm and noivern were poor runners. She had to cling to the hope of the cultists having only innocent intentions regarding her.

“N-nothing,” Nella peeped. “Let’s go.”

“Alright,” the older noivern said, and the group resumed walking in the rain.

A few minutes later the group arrived at the base of a large cliff. There was an opening by the ground, covered with a wall of planks and a door. Nella said nothing as she was brought through. Inside, there were many more blue lanterns to light up the interior. More bat mon were present, sitting on beds of straw or flying from one place to another. All had hoods marked by that same sigil.

“Julie?” spoke up the older noivern, tearing Nella from her thoughts. The golbat of the group flew up to the noivern - she must have been Julie. “Could you let Maxim know we have a new arrival?” the noivern continued. The golbat nodded and flitted to a lone door on a wooden wall in the near distance. As she knocked and entered, the noivern turned to Nella.

“Oh, look at you, all dripping wet,” the noivern said. “I’d offer you a towel, but we don’t have any to spare. What’s your name?”

“N-Nella”, Nella answered.

“That’s a pretty name,” the older noivern said. “My name is Dolores. Nice to meet you.”

“It’s n-nice to meet you too,” Nella replied. At least this noivern seemed nice.

The door from before opened again as Julie the golbat exited. She flew to Nella and Dolores and said, “Maxim will see you now.”

Dolores nodded and began to escort Nella to the door. “Maxim is our leader,” Dolores explained. “He’s the founder of this community and the reason we all get to sleep safely during the day.”

“I see,” Nella said, already getting nervous. The leader of the cult? Scary…

“No need to fret,” Dolores assured, touching Nella on the shoulder, at which the younger noivern flinched. “He may look intimidating, but he’s a kind soul. We can all vouch for him here.”

They reached the door. Dolores opened it and gently pushed Nella in. “See you again soon,” she whispered and drew the door shut.

No choice but to go along with it, Nella turned around to face the room. She saw a modest desk with papers on it and a gliscor sitting behind it, writing something. The tip of his right claw was gone, replaced by a wooden prosthetic. Around his neck was a necklace of large crimson orbs. It looked like a misdreavus' pearls.

The gliscor raised his gaze, and Nella shuddered under his stern eyes. Despite this, the gliscor got up and offered a claw.

“Gliscor Maxim,” he announced himself, his voice deep and raspy. Nella snuck over and took his claw, a little worried about the force of its pinch, but found it to be gentle.

“N-Noivern Nella,” Nella introduced herself, curtsying as they shook hand and claw.

Maxim let go and took his claws behind his back. “So, you’re the new arrival.” Nella nodded. “I take it you’re recently turned, too,” Maxim continued. Nella nodded again. “How long has it been since you were bitten?”

“A few days.”

“How have you managed to survive on your own so far?”

Nella swallowed. Lying wasn’t easy before those yellow eyes.

“I found an abandoned shed I spent the days in,” she said.

Maxim stared back for a moment, deadly quiet. Then, he smiled. “Well, it’s a good thing we found you. Hopefully you’ll find this place a better shelter.” He leaned in. “We do have blood readily available here.”

“Th-that’s good to hear.”

Maxim leaned back again. “Have you found yourself wondering yet what the origin of vampires is?”

Nella tilted her head. “N-not really,” she said, “but I’m wondering now.”

Maxim nodded. “Well, let me tell you.” He circled his desk and began to pace around the room.

“Long, long ago,” he started, “what we now know as vampires were different. They walked during the night, drank blood and did not age, but sunlight couldn’t hurt them. They were the people of the goddess Lunala, the goddess of the moon, and they were prosperous.”

His pacing changed directions. “But that prosperity attracted envy. So much so that the beast of the sun, Solgaleo, lashed out by cursing the nightfolk to burn up in the sun. He also sealed Lunala away in the moon, unable to help her suffering people.”

Nella’s ear flicked at the mention of Solgaleo. That’s the name of Leander’s god, she recalled.

“The numbers of the nightfolk declined drastically,” Maxim continued, “and they were almost wiped out entirely. The rare nightfolk not taken out by the sun were hunted by the dayfolk as monsters, and they were driven into hiding. During the ages, the nightfolk were all but forgotten, and this is how we find ourselves in the situation we are in now.”

He stopped. “This community is more than a safe haven for nightfolk,” he said. “We also seek to undo the curse set upon us eons ago. In Lunala’s honor, we call ourselves the Order of the Moon, and we do for her what we can.”

Nella nodded along. This story sounds like a mere myth, she thought, but then again, what do I know…

“That’s all I wanted to tell you,” Maxim said, returning behind his desk. “You’re free to leave now. The others will accommodate you.”

“Th-thank you,” Nella said, grabbing the handle of the door. She let herself out and sighed in relief the moment she was out of the gliscor’s eyes. In turn, she met the gaze of Dolores.

“See, now that wasn’t so bad,” Dolores said. “Come. You must be hungry.”

Nella nodded and followed the other noivern as she walked to another section of the shelter. Here, there were a few bat mon perched on benches with bowls of blood before them. They were drinking through their fangs. Nella shuddered. It still looked so unnatural.

"Here is the dining area," Dolores explained. "Let me get you a bowl."

"Thank you," Nella said, but then froze. "Wait," she said, and Dolores turned to her. "Where is… that blood from?"

"Oh, just miltank," Dolores assured. "And we treat them well. Don't you worry about it."

Nella sighed in relief. Come to think of it, there was a smell of manure in the air, just like back at the farmhouse. The rain must have masked it somewhat.

Dolores soon came back with a bowl of blood as promised. Nella received it with a thank you and gulped it down. It tasted slightly different from slowpoke blood. Kind of creamy, almost.

"Oh, here comes Freddy!" Dolores said, and Nella turned around. There was a swoobat waddling into the dining area. "Freddy's also new," Dolores continued. "You two should get to know each other." She raised a wing. "Freddy! Over here!"

The swoobat flinched in surprise and headed their way. "I-is something wrong?"

"No, everything's fine," Dolores said, waving her wing. "Freddy, I'd like you to meet Nella! She just arrived here."

"Oh. N-nice to meet you," Freddy said, uncertain.

"I'll fetch you a bowl," Dolores said and walked off. Nella was left alone with Freddy.

"So," Freddy started, clearing his throat, "how are you finding this place?"

"It's… nice," Nella said, grabbing her wing. "Welcoming."

"Y-yeah, same," Freddy said.

"Just a little…" Nella paused. "Unusual. Did you meet Maxim, too?"

"Yeah."

"Did he tell you that story about vampires' origins?"

Freddy nodded. “Do you… believe it?”

Nella took a claw to her chin. “Well… I’m not sure. There are a lot of legends. It could be real.”

“It sounded a bit creepy to me,” Freddy admitted. “This whole place is creepy.”

Nella looked around. “It’s not… that bad,” she said, though didn’t know if she actually agreed. “They’re nice to us, at least.”

Freddy nodded. “Yeah, but I still have a bad feeling about all this. This seems like a cult of some kind.”

It is one, Nella thought, but shut herself up in time. She shouldn’t reveal she had any information about this place that wasn’t just from her visit. Then she’d be asked how she knew that, and she couldn’t tell anyone here about the farmhouse. What if they made her lead them there and did Gods know what to everyone living there?

She paused. How would she get back there undetected, anyway? Would they simply let her leave tomorrow night? Today wouldn’t do, not with that thunderstorm. She had to wait. Even if it meant staying the night at a bunch of cultists.

“Here you go,” said Dolores, setting a bowl of blood in front of Freddy and snapping Nella out of her thoughts.

“Th-thanks,” Freddy said, then reluctantly started drinking. He still had both of his regular canines, so he drank normally like Nella.

The thought made Nella remember her missing tooth, and she frowned. How long would it be until she grew her vampire fangs? She tried the space behind her missing tooth with her tongue and felt something growing there. With time, it would probably erupt out. She shuddered.

Nella and Dolores waited until Freddy was finished, after which the older noivern led them to the sleeping area, which was the assortment of straw beds from before.

“You get plenty of rest, now,” Dolores said to Nella. “You’ve had a rough day.”

“Thanks,” Nella said. “Goodnight. Or day. Whichever you say here.”

Dolores smiled. “We say goodnight,” she said and began to walk away. “Sleep tight!”

Nella curled up on her new bed. The straws poked at her wings, but she knew better than to complain. Freddy still remained next to her, looking nervous.

“Are you alright?” Nella asked.

The swoobat flinched. “Do you… still wanna talk a bit, maybe?”

Nella was tired, but she wasn’t sleepy. It was hard to be sleepy in a den of cultists, no matter how friendly they seemed. What if they did something to her in her sleep?

“Sure,” Nella replied, trying to shake the thought. “How long have you been here?”

“Two days,” Freddy answered. “You just came in, right?”

Nella nodded. “Got lost in the thunderstorm. Dolores and some others found me.”

“They found me, too,” Freddy said. “I’d been bitten by some feral zubat and had fainted.”

“That happened to me, too!” Nella winced, remembering the bite. “Of course, I was lucky to -- wake up in time and find an abandoned shed,” she lied. “I stayed the days there.”

“That must have been cramped.”

“It was… fine.”

Freddy sat down, seemingly a bit more comfortable now. “So… how about before you got bitten? What was your life like?”

Pathetic, Nella resisted the urge to say. “Well, I was a waitress,” she said. “I worked at a diner called Martha’s in Lepach. Do you know the place?”

Freddy shook his head. “I’m from Wingtown. Never been to Lepach,” he said.

“Oh… well, how about you? What did you do for a living?”

Freddy scratched his wing with his claw. “I was… between jobs, actually,” he admitted. “Got fired from my assistant’s job a month ago for screwing things up too many times.”

Don’t bring up your failures to strangers, Nella heard her mother’s voice say. She cringed. It had been a while since she’d last thought of her, and she preferred it that way.

But she was her own woman now. She had to be. Mother wasn’t around to tell her how to act anymore, so she had to make her own decisions now.

“I’ve been in many jobs before, too,” she said. “I guess we’re both bad at that.”

Freddy let out an amused huff. Nella smiled. They might have been on the way to becoming friends.

“I was lucky to have the place close to my parents’ house,” Freddy said. “I don’t know if I could pull off living by myself. I’d get so lonely.”

Nella remembered the nights she’d cried herself to sleep. “It can get that way, yeah,” she said.

Both stayed quiet for a while. Nella began to feel awkward.

“Do you read any books?” Freddy asked.

Nella gasped. I love books, she almost shouted, but Mother’s voice threatened to resurface. “I-I read them from time to time.”

“What kind of books?” Freddy asked, already excited. “I like mysteries!”

Mysteries and adventures. No one seemed to like romance like she did. She clacked her claws together. “Well… I don’t know how to describe them,” she peeped. “I-I guess they’re about people and how they think and act.”

“Ooh, psychological,” Freddy said. “I’m a big fan. Have you read Oricorio Ophelia’s works?”

“I… don’t think so,” Nella replied.

“Oh, they’re juicy,” Freddy said. “Murder mysteries. Occult stuff. Really exploring the dark side of mon!” He looked around. “Of course, it was much nicer to read about it all when I didn’t have to live it.”

Nella scratched her neck. Freddy’s books sounded scary… and heady. Nella was too stupid for those types of books.

“What’s your favorite book?” Freddy asked. “Mine is Surreal Killer. It’s about this cultist serial killer mightyena who gets possessed by a haunter. Really harrowing stuff.”

“My favorite book is…” Nella hesitated. Would he think she was stupid for liking all that lovey-dovey stuff?

She sighed. “Well, I guess I like The Ice Prince,” she said, her love for the book temporarily overriding her embarrassment. “It’s about a deerling maid working for an icy ninetales prince from a faraway land,” she said. “The prince is haughty and arrogant at first and drives the deerling crazy, but they end up getting closer and the prince’s better side comes through.”

“Oh, is it a romance?”

Nella shrank. “No, it’s…” She sighed. “Yes, it’s a romance. I read romance novels,” she admitted.

“Hm?” Freddy tilted his head. ”There’s nothing wrong with that,” he said. “You like what you like.”

Nella grasped her arm. “Really? My mother always said those books were for old maids…”

Freddy waved a wing. “Who cares what your mother thinks? You can read what you want.”

Nella felt her cheeks redden. “Th-thanks.”

“I’ve never really read romance,” Freddy said. “Well, I guess there’s a lot of books I’ve read with love in them… but it rarely ends well. Like in Thorned. An Ophelia classic. A deadly roserade who kills all her lovers.”

Nella shuddered. “You seem to like pretty violent books.”

Freddy shrugged. “I find them exciting.”

“I’d find them too exciting, I think,” Nella admitted. “Wouldn’t be able to sleep.”

Freddy raised a claw to his chin. “I’m sure I’ve read some books I could recommend you. It’s not all blood and guts. Like… The Wool Machine. It’s a satire of capitalism, but it has a meek male mareep meet a rowdy female lycanroc. They have pretty good chemistry, even if they don’t hook up in the book. But it’s easy to imagine they do. You can bring your own romance to the book.”

Nella tilted her head. “Mareep? Isn’t that a bit young?”

“Oh, he’s an adult. There’s just a conspiracy in place that makes the lower class members unable to evolve,” Freddy explained. “He evolves later in the book, actually. Oops -- spoilers, kinda.”

“That’s alright,” Nella said. “It’s not like…” She frowned. “It’s not like I’ll get to read that book now that I’m a vampire.”

“Oh.” Freddy’s gaze fell. “You’re right. I guess there’s no way for a vampire to go and buy books anymore.”

Oh no… I’ve ruined the conversation, Nella thought. I shouldn’t have said anything.

The silence continued until Freddy suddenly huffed again. “I guess we’ll have to write our own books.”

Nella’s spirits lifted again. “Oh, I have a friend that does tha-”

She froze. She couldn’t tell him about Paige. She couldn’t tell him about anyone back at the farmhouse.

Or… could she?

“You have a friend that writes?” Freddy asked.

“Um, I…” Nella took a moment to think. Could she risk telling Freddy her actual background? He was new. He didn’t trust the cultists, either.

“Can you keep a secret?” she whispered.

Freddy shuffled closer. “Yes?”

Nella hesitated, but then spoke. “I know a place with more vampires. It’s not creepy like this place.”

Freddy’s ears perked. “Is that where you really came from?” he whispered back. “That shed didn’t sound like the truth.”

Nella blanched, but nodded. I guess ‘bad liar’ is another thing to add to my long list of faults, she thought. Oh no. Did Maxim know I was lying, too?

“I’m gonna go back there as soon as I can,” she said. “You could… come with.”

“I’d love to,” Freddy said and glanced around. “But do you figure they’re gonna let us leave?”

“I’m gonna tell them I need to get some stuff out of my shed,” Nella said. “I just hope that’ll work.”

“Fingers crossed,” Freddy said, then looked at his wings. “You know what I mean.”

Nella nodded. “I’ll try tomorrow morning. I mean, early night.”

“Just don’t forget to tell me,” Freddy said. Nella smiled, and Freddy smiled back.

“I’m glad I bumped into you here,” he said, no longer whispering.

“Me too,” Nella said. “I like talking to you.”

“Hey.”

Nella turned to the voice behind her. It was a gligar, lying on the bed next to hers.

“Could you two pipe down?” the mon asked, irritated. “I’m about to go to sleep.”

“O-oh, of course,” Nella said. “Sorry.”

She turned to Freddy. “Let’s talk more tomorrow.”

Freddy nodded, getting up. “Yes, let’s. Goodnight.”

“Goodnight.”

Nella watched the swoobat take flight and fly over to an empty bed three beds from hers. She then turned back around and got comfortable again. Well, as comfortable as she could on this pile of straw.

She closed her eyes, and slowly, very slowly, slumber came to her.

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“Attention!”

Nella’s eyes snapped open.

"Everyone to the center hall! We have captured an oppressor!"

Groggily, she got up and looked around. All the other vampires were heading deeper into the cave. Everyone but Freddy, who flew up to Nella.

"What's going on?" Nella asked.

"I don't really know," Freddy said, "but they want us in the center hall. We should go."

Nella nodded, and the two followed the rest of the vampires. They arrived at a high-ceiling opening in the cave and took their places next to the wall. In a minute or so, a group of hooded vampires carrying an unconscious timburr appeared and brought the mon to a horizontal wooden board in the middle of the room. Ropes were attached to the board, and the swoobat of the group tied the timburr down with them with telekinetic powers.

Nella shrank and leaned towards Freddy. "I don't like the look of this…"

"It'll be alright," said a voice from behind them - Dolores. Both Nella and Freddy flinched.

"Wh-what are they going to do to that timburr?" Nella asked, voice shaking.

"We're going to send him on a noble mission," Dolores said. "It's a happy thing! No need to worry."

Nella and Freddy exchanged a look, but didn't say anything.

The crowd split to enter Maxim, who had a zubat whispering something in his ear. As he walked up to the timburr, the zubat left. Maxim stopped before the unconscious mon, turned around and spread his arms.

"Brothers, sisters," he began. "Another ordinary has found out about us. He has been detained and brought before us tonight so that we may do something that benefits both of us and send him away on Lunala's mission."

He turned back to the timburr. "Stand back, now, as I detach his spirit from his body."

Nella and Freddy exchanged another worried look.

Maxim raised his claws. "O mother of the moon, hear the call of us bound to earth. We wish to send you a spirit to aid you in your escape." As he spoke, the crimson orbs around his neck began to glow, and the timburr gained a whitish-blue glow of his own. Dark clouds began forming on top, snaking across the mon's body.

"Detach the spirit from this vessel and let them ascend high above the clouds to your shining prison."

The bluish glow around the timburr detached from the mon, forming an ethereal replica that slowly levitated upwards. It began to stir and opened its eyes - then, it sat up, looked around and screamed.

"Worry not," Maxim said. "You will go to Lunala. She will take good care of you until she can escape, and then you will descend back once again.

The timburr's spirit seemed confused, but a soft voice cutting through the air caught his attention and everyone else's.

"Come to me… my child…"

It was a gentle, feminine voice, speaking from somewhere distant. Still, it made Nella's fur stand on end - more on end than it had been during the rest of this ritual. Is that… Lunala?

She looked around and saw wonder on everyone's faces except Freddy's. The timburr gasped, looking up at the ceiling with starry eyes, as if someone had just taken all the worry out of his heart and replaced it with peace.

Maxim nodded. "That is the grace of our lady, Lunala. It is yours, my friend. Go and fulfill your destiny."

The timburr closed his eyes, smiling, and raised his arms. He floated upwards, all the way up to the ceiling, and phased through, disappearing.

"We thank you, o mother of the moon," said Maxim. "May your shackles soon be broken."

After a few seconds of silence, the clouds around the timburr's lifeless body dissipated, and Maxim's orbs stopped glowing.

Maxim turned around, bringing his claws to his chest. "It is done. You are dismissed."

The air in the cave relaxed and the vampires disbanded. But Nella could only stare at the timburr’s corpse.

“What… just happened?” asked Freddy.

“Maxim sent his spirit off to help Lunala,” Dolores said. “We’re a little bit closer to salvation again.” She nudged Nella, snapping her out of her thoughts. “Are you alright, dear?”

“Um, yes, yes, I’m fine,” Nella said. “Um, by the way, is it alright if I fly back to my shed and go get my things?”

“Of course, dear! But take Freddy with you. He knows hypnosis, which will come in handy if you come across any dayfolk that try to do you ill.”

“Yes, I was going to, anyway,” Nella said, locking eyes with Freddy for a brief moment. “I-I think I’ll go right away.” She stepped past Dolores and headed for the exit with Freddy.

“Have a safe journey!” Dolores shouted after them. Nella’s steps got a little faster.

The two made it to the door and exited without getting stopped. Once outside, both sighed in relief.

“That place is weird,” Freddy said. “Let’s go.”

“Um, just a heads up…” Nella began. “I kind of… got lost during the thunderstorm, so w-we would have to look for the place for a while. Are you okay with that?”

“Anything to get out of here,” Freddy huffed. “Lead the way.”

Nella nodded, took a running start and flapped her wings until she was airborne. She glanced behind her and saw Freddy right behind her. He gave her a smile. She answered it, but let it slip the moment she faced forward again.

They flew up high to have a better view. It was a clouded night and the air was still humid, but it didn’t look like it was going to rain. The ground below was dark, especially after just having come out of a well-lit cave, but their eyes adjusted in time. Nella knew what to look for, anyway - a lake.

It took them a lot of flying around, but finally, Nella spotted a large body of water among the trees and swerved closer to inspect its shores. Soaring along the edge of the lake, she eventually saw three buildings and recognized them as the farm.

“We found it!” she shouted behind her, where Freddy was still flying. “Get ready to land!”

The two mon descended on the land in front of the barnhouse. Nella walked up to the door, but stopped and sighed.

“What’s wrong?” Freddy asked.

“I sort of left without permission,” Nella said, “to see a… vampire hunter.”

“Vampire hunter?” Freddy repeated a bit too loudly, and Nella quickly raised a claw in front of her lips. “There are vampire hunters now?” Freddy asked in a whisper.

“I was as shocked as you,” Nella said. “But… I’d met the mon in question before. He seemed so nice that I couldn’t believe he would hurt innocent people just because they were vampires.” Nella sighed. “Boy, was I wrong. I had to flee for my life, and… that’s how I ended up at the cult.”

“Okay, so we’re definitely calling it a cult now.”

“Yes…” Nella scratched her arm. “I also left out something else. The vampires I’m staying with know about the cult. They warned me about it, actually. And… I just ended up spending the night -- the day there because I was so stupid.”

Freddy stepped closer and laid a wing on Nella’s arm. “Hey, it’s okay. I’m sure they’ll mostly be glad you’re okay.”

“Hopefully so,” Nella said. “Thanks.”

“Anytime.”

Nella turned back to the door, took a deep breath and knocked.

A few seconds later, the door opened. On the other side was Teru, whose apprehensive expression turned into a relieved one as he recognized Nella.

"Nella! Thank the Gods you're okay!" he said, opening the door wide to let her in - until he saw Freddy. "Uh, who's your friend?"

"This is Freddy," Nella said. "He's a vampire too. He's nice. Can we come in?"

"Uh, sure," said Teru and moved out of the doorway, but it was clear he still didn't trust Freddy. "Come in. I'll get you some blood. You must be starving."

Nella realized she was quite thirsty, having skipped breakfast at the cult. "Yes, that would be nice."

The two mon entered into the blue-lit room, and Teru closed the door behind them. Freddy looked around and nodded. "Cozy place."

"Thank you," said Teru, slipping into the kitchen. "I find it rather nice myself."

It didn't take long before Teru returned with two bowls of ice-cold blood and set the dishes before the two mon. They thanked the mismagius and drank quickly, having worked up an appetite from flying.

Once the dishes were empty, Teru dared to pop the question. "Nella, tell me, what exactly happened to you? How did you survive the day?"

Nella shrank. It was time to spill the beans. "Well… you remember how I said I saw Leander when I was gathering berries with Paige and got separated from her?"

"Yes?"

"I didn't just see him," Nella said. "I met him."

Teru's eyes went wide. "What happened?"

"He recognized me from the diner before, but he didn't realize that I was a vampire," Nella said. "And he… he was nice. A-and he talked about how he didn't agree with his family, and I thought he meant that he didn't hate vampires… so I thought I'd go see him again the following night…"

"Oh, Nella…"

"I know," said Nella, squeezing her eyes shut, "Stupid. B-but I went. And it went well for a good while, but then we kissed and he pushed on my tooth and blood came out and the tooth came out and… he realized what I was."

"How did you get away?"

"I… bellowed," Nella said, looking down in shame. "It bought me enough time to fly away. But then there was a thunderstorm, and I had to land, and I fell, and then these people showed up, and I went with them before I realized they were cultists…"

Teru's eyes practically bugged out. "You went with the cultists?"

"I didn't have anywhere else to go, and I was already walking… I just hoped for the best," Nella said, tears in her eyes. Teru was so disappointed… "But it didn't turn out that bad. They didn't do anything bad to me. They even gave me blood!"

"That blood could have had anything in it!" Teru shouted, raising his tendrils.

Nella flinched. She really had been careless…

"With all due respect, sir," Freddy spoke up, "she's been through a lot. Could you not yell at her like that?"

"Oh, don't you talk to me like that, little man," Teru snapped. "I'm still not convinced your intentions are good. I take it you came from the cult? How do I know you're not working for them, hmm?"

"Don't be ridiculous," Freddy said. "I haven't even lost my teeth yet. They couldn't have converted me to their batty religion in that time."

"They could have brainwashed you," Teru said. "I've seen it happen with some powerful psychics. I have no reason to trust you!"

"I guess not!" Freddy said, throwing up his wings. "There, I said it. Are you happy now?"

Teru's eyes narrowed as he stared into Freddy's. Then, the mismagius' eyes glowed cyan, and the swoobat closed his eyes, falling limp and collapsing on the table.

"Freddy!" Nella shouted.

"I just used hypnosis, don't worry," Teru muttered. "He was due for a timeout." He turned to Nella. "Did anything else happen at the cult?"

"Well, I met their leader, Maxim," she said. "He was a gliscor."

Teru's jaw dropped.

"What? Is there something special about that?"

"Did he have a prosthetic claw tip?"

"Yes?"

He brought a tendril to his cheek. "So it is him…"

"You know him?"

"Used to know him," Teru said. "I thought he was dead…"

He shook his head. "Not important right now. Did you see anything else?"

"Well, just this morning they had this creepy ritual," Nella said. "They'd captured a timburr and Maxim… detached the timburr's spirit from the mon and sent him to Lunala. That's what it looked like, anyway…"

"So the timburr left behind was a corpse?"

"Yeah."

Teru crossed his tendrils. "Great. So they're killing people."

Nella fidgeted with her claws. "I don't know… it looked like his spirit was still alive."

Teru sighed. "Nella… that was a trick. You can't separate people's spirits from their bodies. He just killed that timburr and made it look like something else."

Nella thought about it. It looked real, though. And there had been no mon that could have created an illusion there. That she knew of…

Her shoulders slumped. Of course she'd fallen for it. Naive little Nella. Had she stayed, could they have converted her too?

Teru sighed, floated closer and put a tendril on Nella's shoulder. It felt cold, and Nella shuddered.

"Don't beat yourself up over it," he said. "Only a few days ago, you thought vampires were the stuff of fairytales. One can't fault you for being open to believing new things."

"So… everyone there is being tricked like I was?"

"Well… it's not that simple," Teru said. "I know these cults. They have a lot of bad people there, people ready to kill, and not just by some spirit-detachment ritual. This is because they gradually get rid of the members that don't have the guts to do those things. They've probably gotten rid of them via more spirit-detachments. I don't know how many people there are that just got caught up in it like you or Freddy - if he really is innocent, that is."

He hovered back and forth, as if pacing, brow knotted. After a while, he sighed. "Maybe it's time we resort to extreme measures."

"Extreme measures?"

Teru looked at Nella. "Seeking out that place and then going to the White Tiger to lead him there."

Nella's eyes widened. "But… he'll kill them all!"

"I know," he said, "but this cult… this cult is bad news, Nella. At their worst, they used to raid and slaughter entire villages. They can't be allowed to rise again."

"B-b-but can't we rescue the innocents first?"

"And how would you tell the difference between an innocent and an evil member?" Teru gestured to Freddy. "They're as impossible to tell from one another as he is. The bad ones know how to lie, exploit your kindness. They're remorseless. They'll do anything to keep themselves and their cult alive. If we take them in, we'll all be in danger of being killed in our sleep just so they can regain power!"

"But we can't just…" Nella thought of Dolores. Sure, she'd been all for the spirit ritual, but she'd been so nice to her.

But what if she was one of the bad people? How could Nella know? And… could Freddy also be a bad guy? Teru thought so, and Teru was wise… and she wasn't. She was stupid, naive, inexperienced. She'd fallen for the spirit ritual, and she'd fallen for Leander's charms. She was practically waltzing into danger over and over again. But Teru had known better about both Leander and the cult. And her mother. Maybe he should get to make the decisions. She only knew how to make bad ones.

"It's for the better," Teru said, hanging his head. "We have to think about the bigger picture. We'll be saving a lot more people this way than by letting the cult keep operating."

He took his tendril off Nella and floated to the door. "One more thing. What did the place look like?"

"It was a cave at the base of a large cliff," Nella answered. "The entrance was covered with planks to keep the light out."

"Thanks," said Teru. "I'm going to go look for it now. You stay behind. You've been in enough peril already."

Nella looked at Freddy. "What about Freddy?"

"He'll wake up on his own in a few hours," Teru said. "Keep an eye on him. In case he really is one of the bad guys, you know."

Nella nodded, though it hurt her heart. Could the one friend she managed to make on her own have been tricking her? She'd feel even worse about her naivete if so.

Teru opened the door. "Let the others know where I've gone," he said. "Paige is spending time with Caramel while Cole is taking a nap."

"Will do."

"Alright. Goodbye."

With that, he exited. Silence fell over the room, and Nella sighed. She looked at Freddy again. She should probably carry him to some bed instead of letting him lie unconscious against the table.

"Is that it? You're just gonna let him go?"

Nella flinched and turned to the voice. She saw Paige at the door to the walkway to the barn.

"Hi, Paige," Nella said. "Did you overhear what we were talking about?"

"I damn surely did," Paige huffed, and Nella thought it sounded strange to hear her swear. "He's gonna get all those innocent people killed!"

Nella's heart sank. "Yeah, but… there's no other option. If the cult is allowed to keep operating…"

Paige flapped her wings angrily. "Don't just chatot what Teru said! I know you don't believe that!"

Nella scratched her arm. "It doesn't matter what I believe. Teru knows better."

"Nella, please! You have to do what you think is right!"

Her throat tightened. "I can't be so naive. I-I'm just some girl that fell for the cult's tricks. I wouldn't know better than someone who's actually dealt with this cult."

Paige's flapping intensified. "You're so stubborn! Can't you just trust your heart? It can't feel right to stand here while those people get slaughtered!"

Nella hugged herself, her face wrinkling up. "It… it doesn't." She shook her head. "But I'm just not thinking about the future. Teru is. That's why we should listen to him."

Paige crossed her wings. "It's easy to give the hard decision to somebody else, isn't it?"

"No, I'm not --"

"You are. You're scared to take responsibility, so you shove it off to Teru so that you can hide behind him. That's not mature, Nella."

Nella opened her mouth, but didn't know what to say. Tears welled up in her eyes. Paige was disappointed in her. Paige, the ultra-nice woobat. She must have really screwed up now.

She let out a sob, then another, then broke down. "I-I'm sorry," she blubbered. "I'm such a brat, crying like this…"

Paige uncrossed her wings. "Nella… I didn't mean to make you cry. I'm sorry."

"No, y-you don't have to be sorry," Nella said. "It's my fault for crying…"

Paige sighed. "I don't know what to say," she said. "I want to make you understand me, not to hurt your feelings. Can you tell me how to do that?"

Nella sniffled and looked at Paige through her tears. "I do understand you…"

"But you don't want to go save those people?"

"It's not that I don't, I just don't think I should… I mean, I'm just --"

"No, Nella, you're not 'just' anything. You're your own mon, and your opinion matters. And you should do what you think is right. Now, what do you think would be right?"

Nella looked away and paused. What she thought was right… well, she wanted to go and warn those cultists about Leander coming. They would scatter, and then Leander wouldn't be able to kill them. But where would they go? She wanted to offer the farm, but she couldn't do that. While she didn't agree with Teru, he was probably right about there being bad people - at least Maxim if no one else. It wouldn't be safe with them.

But that didn't matter for her decision, did it? She still had to tell them Leander was coming, that much was certain. So… should she…

She sniffled. Yes, she should.

"Paige," she asked, "would you come with me to warn the cultists about Leander?"

Paige smiled. "It would be my pleasure."

Nella smiled back. A few seconds of silence passed, after which Nella returned her attention to Freddy.

“We should probably move him to a bed,” she said.

“Agreed,” said Paige.

After the two had moved Freddy to Nella’s bed to rest, they entered Cole’s room and woke the crobat up. After explaining the situation to him, they asked if he wanted to help. He took a few seconds to look at the both of them before sighing.

“Well, I can already tell I can’t stop you, and Teru would kill me if I let you go see that cult on your own,” he said. “I’m coming with.”

“Yes!” shouted Paige, jumping for joy. “Vampire rescue team, go!”

“We should hurry,” Cole said. “Teru might need to find both the shelter and the White Tiger before his plan succeeds, but the cultists will need time to figure out where they will hide. That is to say, if they’ll even believe us…”

Nella hadn’t thought of that. Why would they believe a group of strangers like them?

Well… they still had to try.

The group was just about ready to head out, but Nella decided they should do one more thing before that. She asked where Paige kept her writing supplies, and once she found a pen and paper, she wrote a note to Freddy and left it on the nightstand next to him. Going to the cult to save innocents from vampire hunter. Will be back in a few hours, it said.

“Alright, now we’re ready,” said Nella, and the two other vampires nodded. Together, the three of them exited the house and took to the skies with Nella in the lead.

Hold on, everyone, thought Nella, we’ll save you yet.

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Part Eight (Finale)

canisaries

you should've known the price of evil
Location
Stovokor
Pronouns
she/her
Partners
  1. inkay-shirlee
  2. houndoom-elliot
  3. yamask-joanna
  4. shuppet
  5. deerling-andre
hello everyone! we're finally here, at the last part! thanks to everyone who's read any part of this story during these little-less-than-two years or given me feedback. my motivation wavered a bit in the middle, but i managed to take this story to the end and finish it, making it my third longest story to date after hh and seiren and the longest pmd story i've written. i don't really think i did an ideal job at everything, but i'm glad the story's done, and i will probably try to amend it to an extent based on any easily workable feedback i get.

this chapter is rated teen. it has violence, injury (burns), death, and more Mother moments meaning more emotional abuse.

thank you all again for reading. enjoy.

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Part Eight

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"I see it! We're almost there!" shouted Nella behind herself, and she saw Paige and Cole nod.

They flew the last few hundred meters to the large cliff and landed before the door at its base. Nella considered knocking, but figured that it would only take unnecessary time. What if seconds was what someone living or dying came down to?

She wrenched the door open and ran inside, Paige and Cole at her heels. Everyone inside turned to stare at the group - even Maxim was there - which made Nella feel a little shy, but she reminded herself again just how important her message was and began.

"Everyone!" she shouted. "You are all in grave danger! There is a strong vampire hunter coming here in --"

"Save it," spat Maxim, stepping forth with a bad-tempered expression. "We know you are working for the dayfolk."

Nella flinched. "What?" She took a closer look at the other vampires and noticed that they all seemed to share Maxim's vitriol, except for Dolores, who just looked… disappointed.

"I had someone follow you as you left," Maxim said. "You went straight to the dayfolk to tell on us. Did you really think you could get away with it?"

Nella shrank. They'd followed her? But she hadn’t seen anybody. Oh, now she'd put the farm in danger…

But what Maxim said didn't make sense. Ghosts weren't dayfolk, were they?

She shook her head. "There's no time for this," she said. "A vampire hunter is coming here. You need to evacuate!"

"Hah!" Maxim threw his claws up. "You think we're going to fall for that? Leave our shelter so you can pick us off one by one?"

"N-no, that's not --"

"And even if there were a vampire hunter, I would protect this shelter! Lunala has given me the power!" He gestured to the orbs around his neck.

Nella tilted her head. That necklace gave him power? From Lunala?

No, he was a liar! He put on a show in order to kill people and claim he was sending their spirits away. Who knew whether anything he said was true?

"Look, get over yourself and listen," Cole said, waddling forth. "This hunter is a White Tiger. The real deal. As a vampire, you don't stand a chance against him even with that gliscor armor of yours."

Maxim raised a claw - the one with the prosthetic tip. "We've heard enough from you traitors," he said. "Seize them!"

Two golbat and one swoobat swooped at Nella and the others with gnarled fuchsia wands in tow. One golbat swung a wand at Paige, casting a pink ball of light at her, which caused the woobat to collapse as it hit. Nella grew wise to what was happening quickly and dodged the spell meant of her, the pressure behind her ears rapidly growing. She had to defend herself! She had to bellow again!

She took a deep breath and faced the other vampires, but --

No, I won't allow it!

M-Mother?


A chime rang through Nella's head as another ball of pink light hit the side of her head. She felt drowsy, drowsier than she'd ever been, and collapsed onto her knees, then her belly. From the corner of her eye, she saw Cole zooming around before a cyan aura enveloped him and kept him steady for another spell to hit him… and Nella couldn't keep her eyes open any longer.

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Nella awoke to murmurs. Her eyes felt like lead, so she had to settle for her sense of touch and hearing to make sense of her surroundings.

She was propped up in a sitting position against something cold and hard - probably rock - and something restrained her arms - probably ropes. She tried to focus on the murmurs, but couldn't make out any single conversation.

"Alright, let us begin."

That was Maxim's voice. Rage lit up inside Nella, and powered solely by that, she managed to open her eyes.

She saw that she was in the center hall, surrounded by vampires on every side. In the middle of the room was that wooden board from before - only now, it was Paige that was strapped down to it.

"No!" Nella shouted on instinct - and regretted it right after as Maxim walked up to her.

"Hm, you must be a light sleeper," he said, but then turned around to walk away. "No matter. You and your friends will be with Lunala in just a minute, anyway."

Nella looked around and saw Cole leaning onto the stone wall next to her, wings bound and sleeping deeply. Oh no. Oh no, oh no, oh no, she thought. I have to do something. I have to bellow --

No, you will not bellow.


Nella clenched her teeth. Mother! What was her voice doing in her head now? Hadn't she gotten rid of her?

You'll never be rid of me, darling, the altaria's voice spoke. And you need me now more than ever. When did you get it into your head thay bellowing was alright, young lady?

When it saved my life!
Nella snapped back, but felt a pang of guilt afterwards. She did start allowing herself to bellow awfully fast…

And what would bellowing do now, anyway? Mother continued. You'd hurt their ears, and nothing more. You'd leave them with such an uncouth image of yourself.

It was true. It was no use. But, Mother…

No buts! If you must die, you must die as a lady. Who knows, you might not make it to heaven otherwise…


Nella stopped breathing. I-is that true? Could being uncouth lead me to… hell?

Well, you know that
some gods want their women to behave, Mother said. If one of those will judge you, you're certainly headed for darkness. Unless you repent.

Nella began to breathe faster. No, she didn't want to end up wandering in cold darkness alone for all eternity!

But… she had to do something. She had to do something to protect her friends. Wouldn’t that be morally better than just acting like a proper lady?

“Please, listen to me!” she shouted, and some of the vampires turned to her. “Maxim is tricking you! He’s not sending people’s spirits to Lunala, he’s just killing them!”

“Don’t listen to her,” Maxim said matter-of-factly. “She was told that by the dayfolk. Poor soul probably believes it herself.” He shrugged. “But once I send her to Lunala, she’ll come around. Now!” He clapped his claws together. “Let us begin.”

“No, you have to believe me!” Nella shouted, but was met with multiple shushes from the vampires.

“Quiet, traitor!” someone shouted.

“Yeah, you heretic!” shouted another.

Pleading, Nella looked at Dolores, but the older noivern only shook her head.

Maxim raised his claws and started speaking.

O mother of the moon, hear the call of us bound to earth. We wish to send you a spirit to aid you in your escape.

His crimson orbs began to glow again, and a whitish-blue glow enveloped Paige. Dark clouds began to form on top of her.

I can’t watch, thought Nella, but couldn’t turn away. Not to mention part of her felt like watching Paige go was the least she could do.

"Detach the spirit from this vessel and let them ascend high above the clouds to your shining prison."

The bluish glow around Paige detached, the ghostly replica slowly ascending. The replica opened her eyes and looked around, but her movements were… wrong. It was clearly not Paige.

The replica looked to Maxim, confused. The gliscor smiled. "Worry not," Maxim said. "You will go to Lunala. She will take good care of you until she can escape, and then you will --”

The replica began to flicker. Then, it dissipated.

“What?” exclaimed Maxim.

A horrible screech rung out, forcing everyone to cover their ears.

A dark form with a cyan glow appeared above Paige - a gengar, in the grip of someone’s telekinetic hold. He was squirming, but in vain.

Another dark form appeared next to him - taller, conical. A mismagius. Teru!

“Worshippers of Lunala!” Teru shouted. “This is the reality of your rituals. An illusory show put on by this gengar!”

The vampires gasped. Their eyes settled on Maxim.

“He is lying,” the gliscor said. “He is just another one working for the dayfolk!”

“Then where did the ‘spirit’ go, huh?” Teru asked. “I’ll tell you where they usually go - into his orbs! When they are glowing, they are absorbing the life force of whoever is getting their ‘spirit detached’!” He pointed down to the dark clouds, which had begun dissipating. “These clouds are lethal gas!”

Murmurs erupted in the crowd. The gengar broke free of Teru’s hold, slinked to the door and sank into a shadow to slide out underneath it.

“Wh- coward,” Maxim hissed to himself. He stood up straight again. “What he says is not true!” He shouted. “These orbs were a gift from Lunala, and they glow in resonance with her holy energy! And the clouds are --”

“Oh, can it, Maxim,” Teru spat. “This whole act you’ve got going on is so tacky. Cult leader? Really? Did you get that bored living the life of a vampire?”

“I am giving these vampires a home!” Maxim shouted. “What have you been doing?”

“The same, Maxim, except I don’t spice up my home life by killing the innocent!”

“Innocent? Hah!” Maxim slashed through the air with a claw. “You know how cruel the dayfolk can be to vampires! You know how they send hunters after us! We used to be them!

The crowd gasped, Nella included.

“That’s right,” Maxim shouted. “We used to be hunters. There! Now you know. It doesn’t change the fact that I am the one who gave you shelter, I am the one who showed you the way of Lunala --”

“Oh, and they should be so grateful,” Teru shouted. “You taught them the ways of the cult you and I worked so hard to extinguish! And those orbs - what the hell do you need to gather all that power for?”

“I need it so that I can protect my flock!”

“Oh, sure, Maxim. You’re doing it out of the good of your heart --”

A thump came from the front door. It had been kicked open.

In the frame stood a white incineroar clad in leather.

“Found you,” Leander said.

Nella looked to Maxim. Utter horror was on his face. “White Tiger,” he whispered, and Nella knew she wouldn’t have heard it without her super-sensitive ears.

Teru, on the other hand, gasped and quickly untied Paige with his telekinesis. He then flew over to Nella and Cole and freed them as well. “Wake him up,” he told Nella. “I’ll get Paige.”

Nella nodded and started shaking Cole. “Wake up… wake up!”

Leander’s yellow stripes began to glow. “It’s useless,” he boomed, catching Nella’s attention. “Surrender now, and you’ll receive a swift death.”

Maxim grimaced and flew up front. “Never,” he hissed. “I will not allow it!”

“So be it,” Leander growled. With a snap of his fingers, his hands were enveloped in flames that threatened to blind any vampire that looked at them.

The vampires gasped.

“What do we do?”

“Use the slumber wands?”

“I don’t want to risk getting hit!”

“We need to escape!”

“But how?”

“Back exit!”

“Yes, the back exit! Let’s go!”

So started a horrible rush for the back of the cave, wingbeats filling the air.

“You’re not getting away!” Leander roared, about to leap after the crowd, but Maxim blocked him first. Enraged, the incineroar punched him in the cheek with a fist of fire, sending him back two meters - but the gliscor stood his ground.

Leander’s blue eyes widened. “How?” he asked. “How are you so resistant?”

Maxim smirked. “Lunala’s power,” he said. He charged up his claw with white energy and gave a punch of his own. Leander stepped back with a grunt before rushing forth again.

“Nn…nghh…”

Nella turned back to Cole, whom she had been shaking this entire time. His muscles tensed underneath her grasp, and soon enough, he sprung up, fully conscious. “What happened?”

“The White Tiger is here,” Nella explained. “We need to leave out the back!”

Cole nodded. “Got it.”

Both of them rushed to the wooden board that Teru and Paige were still at, the woobat still unconscious in Teru’s telekinetic hold.

“Let’s go,” Teru said, gesturing to the mass of vampires still trying to squeeze their way into the tunnel at the back. “Maxim could lose his upper hand at any moment.”

Nella got an idea. “Teru, you should help! You’re really strong! I-I can carry Paige.” She frowned. “And you do owe it after bringing Leander here...”

Teru shook his head. “No, I didn’t bring him here. I didn’t have time to do that yet.”

“But you were going to!” Nella shouted.

Don’t you yell at your landlord! Mother’s voice cut in.

Nella flinched. She was still there…

“I have to see you off safely!” Teru said.

“We’ll be safer if you take care of the Tiger,” Cole said. “If he survives, he’ll just keep hunting us down! This is an opportunity to defeat him when you can!”

Nella looked at Cole, then back at Teru, and she nodded.

Teru glanced at the fighting vampire hunter and cult leader and gave a shallow sigh. “Okay, but only if you leave right now!”

“Of course,” said Nella. Teru handed Paige to her and floated to the fighting pair. The gems on his chest began to glow and soon fired a white projectile of light at Leander, who grunted in pain.

“What?” Maxim exclaimed. “Are you on my side now?”

“I’m on the vampires’ side,” Teru replied, his eyes glowing cyan in hypnosis - but it did not work on the incineroar. Must have been chesto berries.

“Good enough for me.”

Cole and Nella, Paige in her hold, headed for the back exit, which was almost empty of the crowd now. They dashed for the tunnel - but a gligar there raised his claws.

"Where do you think you're going?" he said.

"Out of here, like everyone else," Cole said.

"Nuh-uh," said the gligar. "You guys sold out to the dayfolk. You guys should be the ones to deal the hunter!"

Cole frowned. "And how are we supposed to do that? The guy is glowing! We can't even get close without burning up!"

"Should've thought of that before you betrayed your own kind," the gligar spat. "See ya!"

With that, the mon flew into the tunnel.

"...What was his problem?" asked Nella. "And why did he leave so --"

A weighty rumble came from the tunnel, shaking the vampires to the bone. Once it quieted, Cole flew in.

"Bastard!" he yelled.

"What is it?" Nella shouted back.

"He made the tunnel cave in! We're trapped!"

Trapped? Oh no, nonononono….

"What are we gonna do?" Nella whimpered.

"I guess we have no choice but to hope Teru and Maxim win," Cole said. "How are they doing, anyw-"

A powerful shattering noise cut through the cave. The two rushed to the front of the cave to see a burnt Maxim and Teru on the ground, Leander towering over the gliscor with crimson shards around the mon. The necklace of orbs had been destroyed. No… Teru!

"And there goes your power," said Leander. Flames enveloped his fist, which he drew back and struck Maxim's chest with. A powerful crunch echoed in the cave as the gliscor’s armor caved in. After that came silence.

"This isn't good," said Cole. "If Teru and that cult leader were both beaten… we don't stand a chance!"

Nella's heart throbbed in her ears. Pressure built up. She wanted to scream, she wanted to bellow, but what good would that do?

You would just act like a wild beast one last time before death, Mother's voice answered. Go over there and politely ask that man to kill you and your friends fast and painlessly. That's the only thing left to do.

No. No, it couldn't be. It couldn't end like this. She couldn't die now that she was just beginning to get used to her new life. Paige couldn't die before she'd finished her story and then some. Cole couldn't die before…

Well, she didn't know what Cole wanted to do with his life, but he didn't deserve to die here and now in any case!

Leander turned to Nella, Paige and Cole. The noivern flinched.

"Well, if it isn't Miss Nella's desecrated corpse," he said. "It's time I put an end to that atrocity."

Nella whimpered, but Cole flew in front of her.

"What are you doing?" Nella whispered.

"Buying you time," whispered Cole back. "While I keep him busy, you slip out of the front door. There's no reason we all have to die."

"Cole…" Nella wanted to argue, but she knew that'd only make their chances worse. "Thank you."

Good, yes. A man should handle this, said Mother's voice.

"Okay, White Kitty," shouted Cole. "Slay this!"

His wings glowed white as he spun them forward, creating sharp crescents that shot towards the incineroar. Leander huffed and raised up his forearms in a block. The crescents struck, pushing him back and making him wince. A cut tore itself into the hem of his leather coat.

“You think your sloppy air cutter is going to stop me? Cute.” Leander gathered fire in his right hand, conjuring a whip of flames. He cast it at the crobat, who only narrowly dodged it. Nella could hear the whip split the air and Cole hiss from the light.

Okay, he seems preoccupied, thought Nella. I should try to leave now…

She shuffled slowly towards the door as not to draw Leander’s attention, and she seemed to be succeeding. Still, she grimaced each time Cole barely avoided another whip-strike, squeezing Paige a little tighter. The image of Teru lying on the ground didn’t help, either. Can’t I do anything to help?

Absolutely nothing, darling,
said Mother, and that was that.

...No, that’s not right, Nella thought. I do know one technique…

You better not be thinking of bellowing again,
said Mother. It’s bad enough you did it once.

That time saved my life!

But it did not save face.

Mother --

I will not have you entertain these fantasies of yours! You are not a hero, you are a just a little girl! You would only make a mess of things if you tried to help!


Nella’s heart sank. That was probably true. Her bellowing would hurt everyone, not just Leander - not that it would do anything but distract them.

That’s right, darling. Nothing good comes out of bellowing. That is why I do not want you to do it. Well, that and the fact that it’s a horrid noise. And a good girl is a quiet girl!

The words weighed her down like lead. She had been… very brash lately. She agreed with the choices she had made, but couldn’t she have done them in a more graceful manner? She could become independent without turning her back on her mother completely, couldn’t she?

Of course, dear. Being more independent is what I always wanted for you.

That was true. Men didn’t want women who couldn’t do anything on their own.

She glanced at the door. She was about halfway there now. If Cole just kept up that dance, they’d --

“Gahh!”

Nella looked over to see Cole drop to the ground, a sooty burn running across his face. He’s been hit!

“Finally,” grumbled Leander. He turned to Nella and Paige. “You.”

All of Nella’s hairs stood on end, and the pressure behind her ears clogged them completely. She spun on her feet and ran for the door, ran for freedom --

Something caught her leg, something burning, searing, scalding - the whip of fire - and she tripped, Paige flying out of her hands and onto the cave floor as the noivern smacked against the stone herself.

She spun around as fast as she could, only to meet the tall form of Leander towering over her, the fiery whip in his hand.

Thoughts ran through Nella’s head faster than they ever had.

What do I do now? Do I bellow? No, that wouldn’t do anything! I’d just die an unladylike death! Was what Mother suggested really true? That I could go to hell if I bellowed now?

Oh, yes, dear, yes it is,
said Mother. You will not bellow. You will die with tact. Remember - a good girl is a quiet girl.

A good girl was a quiet girl, yes. She’d just have to remind herself that until she died. A good girl is a quiet girl. A good girl is a quiet girl. A good girl is a quiet --

No.

A quiet girl never did anything. A quiet girl never acted when it mattered. A quiet girl never stood up for her friends.

A quiet girl was a foolish girl.

A good girl was a brave girl.

She planted her wings to the ground to keep herself steady as the incineroar flicked back his whip. She opened her mouth and let the fire inside her free.

SKREEE-O-RO-RO-RO-RO-RO!

The bellow burned her lungs and throat, but it was worth it. She’d done it. She’d done something, even if it wouldn’t change a thing.

Leander fell back with a grunt. Hissing and grimacing, he got back up and swung back the whip once again.

A white projectile of light struck the back of his head. His eyes lost focus and he collapsed right in front of Nella’s feet, unconscious.

Nella looked behind the incineroar. Teru was floating with a tired smile on his face.

“Teru!” Nella shouted in delight, scrambling upright. “You’re okay!”

“Well, barely,” Teru said, lazily shrugging. “Thanks for the diversion.”

Diversion…? By the Gods, she had done something that mattered!

An ominous rumble started, emanating from all around them. Dust and sand fell from the ceiling as everything vibrated.

“Oh, dear,” said Teru. “It’s going to collapse.”

“Collapse?” shouted Nella. “W-w-well, we need to get out of here, then!”

She turned around and scooped up a still-unconscious Paige from the ground. She turned to Cole’s direction, but Teru raised a tendril and made it to him first.

“I’ll get Cole! You get out of here!” Teru shouted.

Nella didn’t have to be told twice. She ran for the door so fast she almost slipped.

A horrible cracking noise came from behind her, but she didn’t turn around. She reached the door and crashed through it and kept running for meters and meters after she was probably safe.

A colossal crash came, powerful enough to shake the ground and trip her and loud enough to make her whimper. She shielded Paige with her wings as she fell, hopefully avoiding injuring her. She groaned and rolled belly-up, then sat up and looked at what remained of the cliff. The entrance and the entire front face of the cliff was replaced by a pile of crumbled rock.

In front of the pile floated a dark, purple form carrying something also purple. Teru and Cole.

Nella wheezed in relief and took a moment to catch her breath.

“Mmm…”

Nella realized the noise came from Paige. The woobat began tensing up, then opened her eyes.

“Nella…?” Paige asked. “Wh…what happened?”

Nella took a deep breath and sighed. “It’s a long story,” she said, “but we’re safe now.”

“We were in danger?” Paige asked, but then flinched. “Oh, right. We were.” She shook herself awake and fluttered out of Nella’s grasp.

Nella got up to her feet and began walking towards Teru, who in turn floated towards her.

“Is Cole okay?” Nella asked. She saw the crobat’s burn mark again and winced.

“He’s breathing,” said Teru. “That’s a good sign.”

Cole began to cough. “Is…” he wheezed. “Is the White Tiger gone?”

“Shh,” shushed Teru. “Save your strength. But… yes, he’s gone. And so is Maxim.”

Nella took a second to think about them both. She didn’t like it when anyone died, but… they couldn’t hurt anyone anymore, at least.

“Nella!”

Nella turned around to face the shout and saw a swoobat approaching from above - Freddy.

“Are you okay?” he asked as he landed. “I read your note. Did it go well?” He noticed the rubble at the cliff. “Oh.”

“Well, a lot of things happened,” said Nella, “but I think we’re safe now.”

“And the other cultists?”

She turned around. “Umm… I think they got away? I don’t think they should have been caught in --”

She quieted as she saw some motion at the top of the cliff. She squinted her eyes and recognized the little silhouettes of swoobat and golbat and other bat mon, including a noivern. About twenty of them emerged from the other side of the cliff and fluttered down. They landed all around them.

“What happened?” asked a female golbat. “Where’s Maxim?”

Teru sighed. “Maxim is dead,” he said. “The cave collapsed on him and the hunter.”

The vampires gasped and whispered among themselves.

Dolores stepped forward. “What does that mean for us? Where will we stay now?”

Nella looked at Teru. Paige looked at Teru. Freddy looked at Teru. Everybody looked at Teru.

Teru sighed. “Alright. You can all stay at my place until you find another place to live.”

“Lunala bless your soul,” said Dorothy, and the other vampires thanked him, too.

“We’re gonna have to have a talk about Lunala,” muttered Teru, but raised a tendril and smiled anyway.

Nella smiled, too.

What are you so happy about? asked Mother. You broke your promise again and bellowed! If you had just waited for a while, that mismagius probably would have saved you anyway --

Shut up,
thought Nella, and kept smiling.

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Fitting twenty vampires in one farm wasn’t easy, and even less so was fitting the miltank from the vampires’ pastures. About half of the vampires had to be moved to the barn to sleep with the slowpoke. No one complained about the smell, but Nella could tell from their faces that they wanted to. At least Caramel was happy to have plenty of guests to pet her.

After blood had been drawn from the livestock and everyone had been fed, Freddy asked Nella again to explain to him what had happened. She gladly obliged

“...and that’s when Teru launched some attack at the back of Leander’s head, and he dropped unconscious,” she said.

“That’s great!” said Freddy. “But… why didn’t he just use hypnosis on him like he did with me?”

“Oh, believe me, I tried,” Teru chimed in, “but the slippery devil had gone and eaten a tray of chesto berries before coming to fight. Probably wouldn’t have been able to sleep for two nights after that.” He shrugged. “Well, he’s got no trouble sleeping now.”

Freddy laughed nervously. “That’s a bit dark, isn’t it?”

Teru chuckled. “I’m a ghost, after all.”

A scratching came from the door. “Open up!” said Paige’s muffled voice.

Teru went to open the door, and the woobat fluttered among the group. “What is it?” Teru asked.

“There’s something outside!” she said, grinning. “You gotta see it! Especially you, Nella!”

Nella was surprised to hear herself singled out. What could be so important to her specifically?

The group made their way outside. A very light drizzle fell from the sky, but the sky was only partly covered by clouds. The waning moon could be seen.

“Come, come!” said Paige as she led them to the field. “Look to the sky! Opposite the moon!”

Nella looked at the moon, then turned around. A rainbow arced against the stars over the dark spruces. No - a moonbow.

Nella smiled as she admired its colors. So Paige had been telling the truth - moonbows did exist.

“It’s certainly a good way to end a hectic night,” said Teru.

“I didn’t know you could see rainbows during the night,” Freddy said.

“Yeah, you can!” said Paige. “And then there’s aurora borealis. Ooh! Imagine how cool it was if those appeared now, too!” She immediately squinted her eyes, looking for any northern lights.

Teru chuckled. “I wouldn’t hold your breath.” He turned back to the moonbow. “I say we just appreciate what we have.”

Appreciate what we have. Nella took a look around, pausing on Teru, Paige, Cole and Freddy each. Each of them had helped her, some more than others. Each of them, she wanted to consider a friend. It was strange - she’d thought that being a vampire would mean being more lonely, but here she was, four friends around her when she used to have none.

She smiled more widely, a warmth spreading from her heart to the rest of her body. She took a deep breath of the humid air and sighed it out. She felt alive. Free. No more was she stuck waitressing for rude clients, no more was Mother’s voice putting her down. She might not have found a man, but she was with people who’d take care of her, and she hoped she could take care of in return. She had a family.

“Should we go back in and tell the others?” Freddy asked. “They might want to see this, too.”

“You’re right,” said Teru. “I’ll go get them.” He floated back towards the farmhouse and disappeared behind its corner.

Nella’s thoughts lingered on the cultists. She thought of how she’d help save them, and she felt pride. She’d hesitated and she’d feared, but in the end, she’d done the right thing. She’d been brave. Brave. It felt good to be brave. She made a promise to herself to keep being brave in the future, whatever that entailed.

She sat down on the wet grass and looked up at the sky once again, making sure to press the sight of the moonbow firmly into her memory.

It was the symbol of the night she’d become her own woman.

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THE END

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So, time to read more about the exciting tales of Nella Swan. I already reviewed chapter 1 and I beta read some of your other chapters if I recall correctly, but it’s been so long since I last read it that I wanted to come into it with fresh thoughts.

Chapter 1:

She wanted to scream. But she didn't. A good girl was a quiet girl.

Ouch

Nella's gaze flicked around his body, his blue eyes, his muscular arms, his grayish-brown chest peeking out from his open coat, his cheek tufts that were long enough to drape over his broad shoulders… with the exception of his colors, it was like Incineroar Arthur had leapt right off the pages of Lionhearted, ready to woo the plain little seamstress with his fierce strength but noble heart...

God, I wish that were me.

“Well, um, that depends," started Nella. "What do you intend to pray for?""Not for anything, really," the stranger said. "Only to thank Him for the day.”

*nam flashbacks to Hunter, Haunted intensifies*

He asked for plans. That meant he liked her. Wanted to spend more time with her. Get to know her better. See her more times afterwards. Enter a relationship. Possibly, hopefully, marry.

No, she was getting ahead of herself. Especially since she couldn’t see him today anyway.

“Actually, I have to go to bed early tonight,” she said. “To have the energy for tomorrow.”

“Oh, I see. What about tomorrow night, then?”

“Well...”

Technically, she had made no plans, but she already knew tomorrow would be just as tiring.

“I feel like it would be the same,” she said, defeated.

“Ah. Shame.”

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Chapters 2 and 3:

Reviewing these together, I don’t have too much to comment on because I remember a lot of it from my beta reading session. This felt like the first step towards Nella gaining control of her own life despite being a vampire as she stands up to her mom, and it was nice to see her mixing with this found family of other vampires.

Chapter 4:

‘“Um, w-well…" Nella turned the book right side up. "I-it's about a kind and quiet lilligant florist in a nice little town which then gets raided by a wandering tribe of warriors led by a kommo-o. She's taken as captive, but then the kommo-o falls for her and treats her like an honored guest.”’

Ohhh, it’s one of those books. Is there a Pokémon equivalent term of Stockholm Syndrome?

Problematic romance book tropes aside, the interaction between Nella and Paige was as sweet as Slowpoke blood. Hearing Paige talk about her writing and interest in stories was adorable. And it continued to be adorable from there; it was so cathartic to see Nella petting the Furfrou despite the inner conversation she has with her mom.

Chapter 5:

“My lady, may I?" asked Wulfric, arms spread - oh Gods, those biceps too - and awaiting. For a moment, Nella wondered if it was appropriate to already get so physical with someone he'd only met moments ago

Bruhhhhhhh

“Nah, I can only blow stuff up," she replied. "Watch!"

"No!" shouted Teru, just in time to stop a telekinetic dung explosion.”

lmao

It was a slow start to the chapter. I got the point of the dream sequence and it was hilarious when Wulfric came into the picture, but I think it took a really long time to get there since the opening builds up so much for something that doesn’t advance the story. But I like how as the chapter goes on, Nella gets increasingly stir crazy about her circumstances. When her whole life up until that point has revolved around work and keeping up impressions, she’s really left with nothing but her thoughts. I hope this will lead to her carving out more of an identity for herself along with straying away from her mother’s influence.

Chapter 6:

I really liked the scene between Nella and Leander; their interactions together were deliciously awkward. There was good tension there from how the dynamic had changed and Leander still seemed to be on good terms with Nella but there was still something wrong with him under the surface, up until the point he turned on Nella, which was heartbreaking. I think Nella dodged a bullet though since, vampire hunting stuff aside, he seemed like more of a womaniser than an actual respectful lover.

Chapter 7:

“No need to fret,” Dolores assured, touching Nella on the shoulder, at which the younger noivern flinched. “He may look intimidating, but he’s a kind soul. We can all vouch for him here.”

Famous last words.

“What’s your favorite book?” Freddy asked. “Mine is Surreal Killer. It’s about this cultist serial killer mightyena who gets possessed by a haunter. Really harrowing stuff.”

( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

“Don't be ridiculous," Freddy said. "I haven't even lost my teeth yet. They couldn't have converted me to their batty religion in that time.”

He said it. We can go home now.

Chapter 8:

“No. No, it couldn't be. It couldn't end like this. She couldn't die now that she was just beginning to get used to her new life. Paige couldn't die before she'd finished her story and then some. Cole couldn't die before…Well, she didn't know what Cole wanted to do with his life, but he didn't deserve to die here and now in any case!”

I felt like Cole got the short end of the stick in terms of characterisation in this story, but this got a chuckle out of me at least.

--

So this was a nice read overall. All of the fictional romance book references made me smile as an avid romance reader. I would say Nella needs to get a better taste in literature but I’m the exact type of person who would eat up a Lucario romance. As usual, your worldbuilding is unique and your characters are endearing. Paige was the standout character here, just so bubbly and full of energy, which is exactly what Nella needed. And Nella‘s arc of taking life into her own hands rather than being defined by her mother’s ‘seen and not heard’ mentality is a good one too. It was a satisfying ending for her to finally take action to save her friends and feel at peace with herself.

However, I think it gets a bit murky leading up to the ending since the last couple of chapters rush by really quickly without as much build up as I would’ve liked. Especially with the introduction of Freddy, who felt like an interesting foil to Nella and Paige but got introduced far too late into the story to make much of an impact. Heck, I honestly would’ve replaced Cole with Freddy.

While the cult is a running question throughout the story, I wish they were a more antagonistic force throughout rather than a problem that it dealt with in two chapters. Not that the story needs more conflict since there was still a lot to hook me in previous chapters, just that I thought the story could’ve had more momentum had they been introduced sooner.

I have VERY mixed feelings on Teru plotting to kill the cultists, innocents included. Up until that point, I really liked him as the team dad, but that moment just felt out of character for him even given his stern nature at times, and considering how the characters react to it (I mean, holy shit, wouldn’t you?), he gets off the hook way too easily. It ultimately turns out to be moot since he lets the surviving cultists stay at his place anyway. I guess without it, there’s no reason for Nella to go back to the cult to stop him and have her moment in the spotlight, but it could’ve been handled better.

I also wished that Nella’s interests were explored further outside of reading her romance novels and pining for Leander. I really liked how chapter 5 showed her not knowing what to do with herself without any work so I hoped the story would follow up on that (or if Nella decided to write her own, channeling her romance fantasies into something that would keep her occupied for ages), but it didn’t quite deliver. I like the idea of her not needing to be with someone to be happy, but because of that feeling that her arc felt somewhat incomplete, it didn’t feel like she naturally reached that conclusion aside from Leander being a jerk.

All of this is to say that I really enjoyed this story despite my complaints. There is very little that scratches my itch like your stories, and it'll be interesting to see if you return to PMD at some point.
 

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Hey there, here for Review Blitz! I’ve been intending to check this fic out for a while now, so I figured I should take the opportunity. I don’t know much about the fic beyond the premise, and that it’s short, so I’ll be reviewing the first half this time around to review the second half at a later time. With all that out of the way, let’s get to it!

Thoughts on Parts 1 to 4:
  • I feel for Nella right off the bat (get it, because-). The first interaction here between her and the Gumshoos works to establish her anxiousness in a very effective (and relatable, my god i would die in this position) way. Her interactions with the various characters are charming too, and by the end of the chapter I feel like I understand her pretty well.

  • Leander is interesting. He has some obvious sun-motifs going on, which is uhhhh unfortunate knowing the premise. Nella's sudden crush on him and the way that colors her actions felt genuine and well done.

  • Her relationship with her mother is established well too. From the way her voice seems to linger in Nella's head (admittedly I was a little confused at first when they broke into conversation, thinking some kind of telepathy was going on), it’s clear that her mother has an overbearing presence in her life, and I get the impression Nella got her anxiousness from the way she’s been raised. It makes sense that an Altaria (known for being soothing) would raise their daughter to be quiet, though it's unfortunate when the daughter in question is a Noivern ^^;. It does feel like her mother’s parenting prioritized her own desire for a "perfect ladylike daughter" over Nella’s needs, forcing her to suppress vital parts of herself. A common story in real life translated into Pokémon by analogy.

  • The reveal that Nella was turned into a vampire, and her slow panic and disbelief at that, all felt very real. Her reactions in general throughout Part 2 are easy to sympathize with: shock and horror mixed with uncertainty, self-blame, and internalized misogyny. She is not okay :sadwott:.

  • I like Teru and Paige. Paige seems energetic and a little naive, and I appreciate the levity she helps to bring to this part (I like how she tells Teru to cook real food for Nella, both out of concern for Nella’s comfort… and so that she can have more blood for herself :P). Teru mostly just seems kind so far, but his dynamic with Nella is sweet: she’d be taking this a lot worse if anyone else were acting as her guide to all of this.

  • Some of the vampire worldbuilding we got is interesting. Being weak to any source of light (as opposed to just the sun) is a noticeable weakness, but being able to bear lights with cool colors is a clever workaround that matches the undead aesthetic.

  • Nella hearing a Noivern’s bellow and reacting to it with dread and shame was really sad. Her mother really screwed her up.

  • The bulk of Part 3 is Nella confronting her mother, and oof. The way Nella just shrinks submissively under her words and she starts criticizing herself the same way her mother would… it hits a little close. As wrong as it feels to say, I feel that it’s in moments like these where Nella’s character shines through the most, as you do an incredible job of describing her thought process and navigating through her insecurities.

  • And then it ends with Nella realizing that none of this matters anymore, which is triumphant in a way. But the way Nella came to that conclusion, basically calling herself a monster with no future, also feels a little sad and bitter. Like she’s angry about her situation and is using that to fuel her courage, rather than something positive or affirming.

  • We learn that Leander is a White Tiger AKA a vampire hunter, as well as about the Lunala cult. I wonder if the cult has anything to do with that vampire zubat we saw... This acts as the background plot for the story, and I imagine it's not something that'll come to a head until later: this is a very slow-paced story about a Noivern coming to terms with her vampirism and herself, and I enjoy it for that.

  • The scene with Paige was really cute! Paige really does act as an anchor for Nella in this story: her energy and optimism are infectious. I like how she introduces Nella to the idea that her life doesn't have to be over, that there's still a future for her even if its not the one she had imagined for herself. And then of course, that summons...

  • Mother voice comes in hard here. It almost seems harsher than the real thing, trying to twist Nella's positive feelings into something that she should feel deeply ashamed of. And so the Caramel scene that follows ends up feeling cathartic, as the presence of Dog and her desire to share the happiness Paige is trying to show her end up winning over her inner critic.
I only spotted one potential error:
Only once the door had slammed shut on his wake could Nella let her forced vigor melt away.
I'm pretty sure "in his wake" is more correct here, but admittedly there's a voice in the back of my head that's unsure.

I've really enjoyed this story so far. Like I said a little earlier, it's a very character-focused story about Nella trying to self-actualize in the face of a massive life change. Her character and her numerous insecurities are the fic's key element, and they are handled with a lot of care and focus. I like the interactions she has with others, and the way these reflect back onto her character and show us new sides of her. I also feel that, as a PMD fic, the genre is used well: Nella's Noivern traits matter, in the sense that they are one of the many things her mother tried to suppress, and that in addition to everything else helps to hammer home the point of how she's been traumatized. The worldbuilding is also on point for the scope of the story: it does feel like the feral/civilized intelligence divide was taken for granted (in the sense that it felt like I was expected to expect it), but generally I think it's well done, and I found a lot of the vampire and ghost worldbuilding in particular to be clever and interesting.

All that to say that I look forward to coming back to this fic! I'm invested in Nella's journey and want to see where it goes next, so I will see you when I get back around to the rest of what this story has to offer.
 
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