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Aw. This was cute, and a great example of defamiliarization. By giving us a new perspective, the time spent not knowing what quite is happening is the time spent most fully perceiving whatever is written. The bit with the red light and the visit to Mewtwo were both great examples of this. (It...

I should be working on my Catnip assignments, probably, but once I started writing about The Tessellation Solution I found it hard to stop. Your stories always straddle that line between ambiguity and satisfying narrative that makes interpreting them so enjoyable. After reading this the first...

Quick impressions of German opening -- the disappearance of humans detailed there feels reminiscent of the Rapture. The Great Flash reminds me of the Big Bang, and of course the mention of multiple gods. It gives the legend an eclectic vibe, which I like. Also interesting that humans are...

@Ambyssin This is the second time I've made an inadvertent reference to a well-known video game. It was even more incidental here, though, because I've actually never played an Ace Attorney game. Might need to make it my gimmick. The daughter drowning and pictures in the bathroom is loosely...

Grillz are like decorative braces you put in your mouth. (I'm describing it poorly but they're a real thing, promise, often associated with pimps.) Some of the prose here is a little weird because I was trying to be experimental, as part of my 'try different style and tones and genres' concept...

I went ahead and read Earth at Peace for some context. There's not the same level of detail here as there, but it allows space for more ambiguity in the wording, which I always enjoy. My one suggestion was for this part to have a touch more specificity: This occurred to me because I read...

Oh? A PMD story about being transgender, maybe? Even if not, there be queerness ahead... I'm intrigued! The transformation aspect lends itself well to identity themes, I'm honestly surprised I haven't seen it more often. This is a solid opening paragraph. Our protagonist is caught in a liminal...

Recently got the bug to write an OT fic—or my version of an OT fic, anyway. It's the most I've enjoyed writing anything pokémon related in a while, so figured I'd share it with others. Hope y'all enjoy it too. Thanks to SparklingEspeon for looking it over. Summary: A child goes on a journey to...

Murry Chrimblmus, Luker. I’m your secret santa this year, so gonna do a thorough read through of chapter three. Now, I admit, at the start I felt a bit lost, so went back to refresh myself on the first two chapters--and was still somewhat lost until I realized we were coming at this from a brand...

I'll stick to one fic per author, and try to keep it mostly on TR. I also wanted to only select completed fics, but my list grew very short very quick with that limitation. Envy of Eden by @kintsugi - One day I'll finish the essay I've been working on for this story. It's at its best when...

There's a lot of emphasis on water in this opening chapter. The way Hiro describes waking "as if he'd woken up a morning after swimming the length of the ocean floor", the way he spies his reflection in the river, the way he dunks his head into it to drink. It calls to mind baptism, rebirth, new...

Was originally gonna post this for the oneshot contest, but that sure as hell didn't happen. Just some experimental world building, not even sure how much of it will stick. Thanks to SparklingEspeon for being a sounding board on short turnaround. Summary: The creation of a mystery dungeon...

Shortening Eternatus to Natus is just mean. This felt like a table setting chapter. Mostly just solidifying and clarifying the information we already knew or suspected and giving us some downtime from the last action-packed segment. Also, Xander and Shimmer are a lot closer than I first...

Okay, first of all, apologies to all the lovely people who left comments on this story. I promise I wasn't ignoring your thoughtful responses out of ill will or anything like that, lol. It was a wonderful surprise to come back to, appreciate you all. With that out of the way, some replies:

The first half of this chapter was very shounen, haha. And the back half had some major reveals. :o Thoughts on the fight scenes: I liked them. Especially the fight against Nikki. There was a lot of emotional tension as we watched them grapple with subduing her while Nikki also grappled with...

Trying a slightly different format. I’ll divvy these up by chapter on ffnet but keep them together here so I’m less likely to spam post. Chapter 8 Did I somehow miss this before? Or forget about it? That’s interesting. Reminds me a lot of the Celtic Britons vs Roman/Anglo-Saxon Britons...

Here from catnip! I’ve been meaning to review your stuff for a while. Glad I’m finally getting the chance. I like how this starts immediately with stakes important to the main character. We know Tetsuya is in a lot of trouble and that the consequences affect his son. It gives me a reason to...

I wonder how much of your medical knowledge you intentionally curtailed for the sake of Yuna’s ignorance. I always enjoy that sort of meta-decision, it’s a fun give-and-take between real life expertise and remaining in-character. A little nitpicky, but why would she turn away if she was just...

Is this the first time we’ve had two separate chapters happening parallel to each other time-wise? Huh. It almost feels like Noctum and Vortex are foils to each other. I’ll be curious to see if/how that develops. They also highlight the class warfare thread running through the entire story...

Sorry I took a bit of a break from reviewing this, haha. I’m back on that reviewing grind, though! Since I’m fairly far behind, I’m going to try and be brief in the name of catching up as quickly as possible. Fraud is a great name. I wonder if the first symbol is a reference to fairy...