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Poor alphonse is innocent enough, and alien enough, not to understand the pull of time on his trainer. He can see the symptoms, via the change in her bones density via ostreoperosis. He can calculate that things are slowing down but you get an immediate sense he doesnt quite grasp why. And...

Making the world.go.round Blitz review And we're in a mystery dungeon with a mew mo-human protag who is playong the lying game. And the survival game. I mean yeah, need to save the world, but for now we need coins for supplies and supliments to make it day to day and build up the home base...

Review Chapter 1 Turos reassurance in the face of turbulance... "It only kills a few people thats why, when it does, it gets televised...." Feels a little flat to be honest. He's lucky sada doesnt get airsick. I raise you tying science do dads to a lizard and doling it out to ten year olds...

Blitz review Oneshot event I guess its porygon apreciation day today. Lets get started. Love how a classic horror trope (cant sleep ominiscient) is just shrugged off as a "way things are" sort of thing. And how it easnt a way things always were... Butnthat thats nit a bad thing. I can only...

Chapter 1 - 3 Blitz review Nice so we are establishing our point of view character pretty young here. Its a sweet scene with the kiddo getting being scared and the classic lulliby to sooth away the fears... Swablu are probably the gentlest looking birds in canon so it seems fitting they'd be...

(I see shank named the new system, and erik inspired the names with his food obsession -way to wa-use Arceus' blessings-) Granted, you get a pair of cool sunglasses... Literally so cool they are made of dry ice and break down outside of nonfreezing conditions. I'd really recomend you dont...

Chapter 13 Blitz review Love how the guide is a sun burst and the heratics are a moon logo. Can you say they're pushing thier thematic differences as hard as possible. I see what mint said about hearing it first. I'm sure Enigma is glad he doesnt have ears at this point... Thats a gutsy...

Chapter 12 Blitz review And so we begin the long drag part two. You can see cleos trying to make it work though insuspect harl' ittle trip through the brambles isnt something she grieves too much... And of course we go from the pot and into the hound'line ran fire... Cant tell if harl's...

Chapter 11 Blitz review So our absol friend skimrished with cleo and co and then bailed? I bet that made a sleeplessness night for the three. And of the three i vote mischief has the more accurate idea. And i kinda worry that cleos "leading them back" might be optimistic and their "stalkers"...

Chapter 10 Blitz review And we are back to the dastardly duo amd i called it enigma is the seasickest thing in a ninty mile radious. Except its a river. And beimg undead how does that work? Does he regirgitate the nightmared of days past? Harl: i got easy as pie trolling, blackmail, a...

Chapter 9 Blitz review Spark: so, just checking, but we're not doing what we were told? Cleo: is water wet? (Before mischief can ask anything) we're just... Merging objectives... Thats all. I can see.this going so bad. (Goes off to make popcorn). To sparks complaint i would say cleos being...

Chapter 8 Review blitz So we got a bunch of dead and tied up sirviper bodies. The waters gotta be tainted for sure... Now torch as over the head illumination on a stick? Or the britishism of a torch... Like a us version of a flashlight? Because imagining spark held fisted in tinkers arm...

Chapter 7 Review blitz And we are back to the baddie squad. Hydreigon: "so like i know you think you're hiding but i can see your body sticking out of the wall... You only phased your head through... Its like a cat sticking its head in the shoe and thinking he's invisible... But he isn't"...

Review blitz Chaoter 2 (finale?) Love the poe quote it fits the tone very well. General grary thompson is definitly feeling the poe-ism down to his bones. He's lost all sense of time. All ties to his family and probably only holding onto the ghost of patrioism at this point since america has...

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So we get gio's back story. I called it in that he was from mundane land. And for simplicitys sake we are sticking with gio as his real life names too much of a mouthful to bother with and old habbits die hard. So emmet not only got shunted along to arceus timeline world but modern l.a. as...

Yes shank, ask the million dollar question. Why a leaf stone? Why a leafon? (I mean really a grass type, not that i have prejudices but i guess i do.) Laughs. I see i triggered some lantant despicable me vibes her. Fish gun anyone? Love how salts just rolling with it and i hope erick...

Review blitz full story comentary Honestly, I've dipped in and out of this story and series since i joined the site. I like the premiss of evil red. And a protag dealing with the aftermath of a deeply psychological scarring experience by latching onto a malovent god figure to cope and a...

Chapter 2 blitz review Hi so this isnt a one-shot now? Whoops... Alright lets hit this up for chapter two i guess. So we have initial contact. I wonder what feels off to make the ai move so gingerly as after last chapters revelation that Turo is as oblivious as Sada would like. Yeah sada...

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