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I'll stick to one fic per author, and try to keep it mostly on TR. I also wanted to only select completed fics, but my list grew very short very quick with that limitation. Envy of Eden by @kintsugi - One day I'll finish the essay I've been working on for this story. It's at its best when...

There's a lot of emphasis on water in this opening chapter. The way Hiro describes waking "as if he'd woken up a morning after swimming the length of the ocean floor", the way he spies his reflection in the river, the way he dunks his head into it to drink. It calls to mind baptism, rebirth, new...

Was originally gonna post this for the oneshot contest, but that sure as hell didn't happen. Just some experimental world building, not even sure how much of it will stick. Thanks to SparklingEspeon for being a sounding board on short turnaround. Summary: The creation of a mystery dungeon...

Shortening Eternatus to Natus is just mean. This felt like a table setting chapter. Mostly just solidifying and clarifying the information we already knew or suspected and giving us some downtime from the last action-packed segment. Also, Xander and Shimmer are a lot closer than I first...

Okay, first of all, apologies to all the lovely people who left comments on this story. I promise I wasn't ignoring your thoughtful responses out of ill will or anything like that, lol. It was a wonderful surprise to come back to, appreciate you all. With that out of the way, some replies:

The first half of this chapter was very shounen, haha. And the back half had some major reveals. :o Thoughts on the fight scenes: I liked them. Especially the fight against Nikki. There was a lot of emotional tension as we watched them grapple with subduing her while Nikki also grappled with...

Trying a slightly different format. I’ll divvy these up by chapter on ffnet but keep them together here so I’m less likely to spam post. Chapter 8 Did I somehow miss this before? Or forget about it? That’s interesting. Reminds me a lot of the Celtic Britons vs Roman/Anglo-Saxon Britons...

Here from catnip! I’ve been meaning to review your stuff for a while. Glad I’m finally getting the chance. I like how this starts immediately with stakes important to the main character. We know Tetsuya is in a lot of trouble and that the consequences affect his son. It gives me a reason to...

I wonder how much of your medical knowledge you intentionally curtailed for the sake of Yuna’s ignorance. I always enjoy that sort of meta-decision, it’s a fun give-and-take between real life expertise and remaining in-character. A little nitpicky, but why would she turn away if she was just...

Is this the first time we’ve had two separate chapters happening parallel to each other time-wise? Huh. It almost feels like Noctum and Vortex are foils to each other. I’ll be curious to see if/how that develops. They also highlight the class warfare thread running through the entire story...

Sorry I took a bit of a break from reviewing this, haha. I’m back on that reviewing grind, though! Since I’m fairly far behind, I’m going to try and be brief in the name of catching up as quickly as possible. Fraud is a great name. I wonder if the first symbol is a reference to fairy...

It was a character moment where Tobin starts to shut down and then pulls herself together. I did sort of go back and forth on this one. But I kept it because it's meant to feed into the magical realism atmosphere, as opposed to being purely figurative. This is kind of tricky to answer...

author’s note: remember how I said I had a weakness for writing surreal scenes? yeah… you’ve been warned, lol. this chapter was really really really hard to write and underwent copious revisions. in the end, I decided to just post if I ever wanted to finish lmao. I Walk Through Your Dreams and...

Hullo, Luke! I’m here for Catnip. I checked out the first chapter. Here are my thoughts: The narration is often quite playful. It almost feels like the omniscient narrator from the anime is commenting on June’s start. I’m not usually that into exclamation marks in prose, but surprisingly it...

Oh, I just saw this! Thanks, appreciate it. Glad both the noir elements and the magical realism elements shone through, that was definitely the goal. I wouldn't worry too much about understanding right away. A lot of the meaning will make sense once the story is concluded. That said, much of...

Both stories I’ve read from you seem to deal with grief and loss in some form or another. Not that I’m complaining, I tend to gravitate toward these themes regardless. And elements of surrealism! Nice. Anything involving dreams causes me to automatically default to David Lynch. What’s most...

Beta read by MadderJacker and DemiurgicPen. Also got some advice from Shadow of Antioch. Pizza with a Slice of Pain Long ago, Mt. Travail was a terrible place indeed. The mystery dungeon's peaks and ridges loomed over their surroundings with a brooding ferocity. But then one day a drowzee...

Nice, TR is so much more convenient for formatting reviews than ffnet. Appreciate the crosspost. I probably won’t focus too much on old prose since it’s, y’know, old. If you want me to talk about this aspect at all just shoot me a DM. Right off the bat, the dialogue and Riley’s internal...

Hullo, hullo again! I enjoyed this chapter despite the flaws other people have already mentioned. Tricky's character in particular does a lot to carry it, as she seems to have the most agency out of the children (partially because the focus is on her, of course, but the point stands). I...

author's note: this is the first part of a threeshot I've been working on for a while now. lately, I've been wanting to mess around with different genres in the pokemon world. it works really well given how open-ended pokemon is. also, for once, it isn't pmd. been wanting to dabble with ranger...