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An actual review for the prologue, after I read it and did some art for Smeargle Swap! Way too long because I cannot shut up but I hope it's illuminating. I'm a little confused by the "his own". Usually the "own" in a situation like this would be added to clarify which character is being...

Author's note: Hello, all! This story was originally written in 2012, then revised fairly significantly in 2020 and posted here. I got some good feedback on that one, and have been working on more extensive revisions on and off since. This, finally, is version three. I would still appreciate...

Fic title: Of Sands and Shadows Fic link: https://forums.thousandroads.net/index.php?threads/of-sand-and-shadows.458/post-51150 Chapters: 1 Weekly theme: yes

Hey! I'm back with a proper review of chapter one. I thought I might review three chapters at once but then I went on to write an essay and it's 4AM, so I'll just post this one and return to it later. Something easily fixed that jumped out at me here - it's not obvious until the next sentence...

Thank you for thoughts! Mark understands Sandshrew fine, but sometimes the fic has brief untranslated Pokémon vocalizations: - In a few cases (mostly Eevee), it's essentially 'baby talk' - a young/childish Pokémon babbling something that's not intelligible words. - Usually, it's just...

Chapter 40 is here, in which I enthusiastically describe Mark and May making their way through a gym puzzle, they earn their final badge, we see a familiar face again, and Letal gets some more focus. Chapter 40: In the Dark They arrived in Acaria City around noon the next day. Acaria City...

Chapter 39, in which we kick off the second half of the fic by recapping and clarifying the plot. Featuring: this universe's time travel mechanics! Chapter 39: The Workings of the War Route 315 was painfully long. There was no upwards hiking for a change, which did make it a bit more...

Get ready for some more Carl and our next legendary battle! Chapter 38: Volcaryu “It’s half past six. Get up.” Mark opened his eyes and immediately regretted it. He recoiled and squinted at the bright light above him, first not sure where he was, until his eyes found the middle-aged...

Chapter 37 time! In which Pupitar gets punted into lava. You are allowed to just skim the Mark/Alan battle here; it's not bad as my battles go but it's very long and not really relevant to anything other than a couple of fun pieces of thoughts/dialogue. Chapter 37: Carl “I have to hand it...

Welcome to chapter 36, in which Mark tries to convince the inhabitants to evacuate a town built on the inside of a volcano. With this, I've finally caught up with the chapter art again, so chapter 37 will be coming when I've finished the art for that. Chapter 36: The Crater It was a...

Another legendary battle already?! YUP Chapter 35: Suicune And with the northern wind, he came. Mark shivered as an icy chill blew past them and a being of unimaginable grace dashed by through the forest, eerily close to where he was hidden. He watched the slender blue creature slow...

"But she didn't do that! She was vague and waffly and not voicing any serious suspicion of anyone until I started accusing her for real, and only then did she suddenly go into rage mode accusing anyone and everyone. Seriously, doesn't anyone else see it?" [[OOC, one of the reasons I didn't like...

"What do you mean, can be dismissed? I'm not voting for you because I expect you to prove who you are, I'm saying you haven't been acting like someone who really has a useful role. If you'd reacted earlier like you really thought your role was that helpful, trying to persuade us why we should...

[[There is nothing personal on my end, for what it's worth. I'm trying to stick to RP this time, and May is an angry, blunt character. I do 100% stand by her vote and reasoning, however.]]

"For what it's worth I didn't say anything about you suspecting the Sableye," May snapped. "And stop saying I'm voting you for no reason. I've been telling you why this whole time. Doesn't anybody else think the way she's acting is really weird? A while back here she was accepting being voted...

May took a deep breath. "I'm not saying it's definitely you. I'm just saying..." She wanted to get out of this place. Leave and never come back. "...I'm just saying if I'm not here tomorrow to say it, and the Flygon's one of the killers or whatever, then people shouldn't assume you turning...

"The mafia or whatever the hell isn't going to get a chance to kill you for your role if we kill you first because you were acting suspicious trying to hide it!" May shouted. "What kind of argument is that? Innocent people don't act like this!" (Not kill. Nobody was supposed to really die.)...

May rounded on the Flygon, gritting her teeth. "Well, if you said you have a useful town role and we shouldn't eliminate you, how about you actually tell us what it is instead of standing there giving up?! I didn't vote for you for no reason, I voted for you because you're acting really sketchy...

Chapter 34! In which I murder an innocent bystander. Chapter 34: Return to Cleanwater They were on their way back to Stormy Town to get their Pokémon healed when they met Sparky on the road. He looked at them with one of his amused grins. His silver shades were now appropriate for the...

[[think you have me confused for somebody else, Sinderella; I haven't voted for anyone yet.]] May took a deep breath, watching what was going on, her heart quickening, a sick feeling in her chest. "Look, earlier, when the Sableye went after the Flygon for not defending herself, when there was...