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hey all! chapter four is here. now i know i said this the last time and the time before that, but this time im also not sure what to write next, so it really might end up taking even longer. thank you for bearing with me anyway lol. though ill probably keep it shorter than this one. this one...

Hey there! It took a while, but I read the first chapter as per the review exchange, and here are my thoughts. Quote Comments Sentence cuts off? *graveler Protag makes a point of not giving Brock any confident gestures, but then a little bit later he smirks, presumably on purpose? oh...

Hey! Got this story rolled in Catnip, so I'm back. I recapped a bit and it feels like you've rewritten the prologue and added a lot to it, but since I don't remember exactly what I read, I'll just say that I think the opening sequence is much more exciting. I also think that Zarude and Zeraora...

Hey! Read Fate's Design as part of the review exchange. Here are my thoughts. Quote Comments well i think thats the highest death count ive ever seen in a first paragraph Shouldn't Draconic be capitalized given it's a people? Or is there some kind of disdain I'm missing? *salamence Is this...

July 28th Game Organizer: Canis Sign-ups open until Tuesday, August 2nd 10:00 EST [countdown here] You have until the end of the countdown to submit your fic of choice. You may change it anytime up until the rolling takes place. Submit to me via TR or Discord DM. Review window opens: once...

Hey there! Starting off another exchange with Born, Rebuilt. Quote Comments I like the nicknames given to the creatures based on their appearance. It reminds me of The Land Before Time that way. I read this multiple times and couldn't understand what it meant until later when I figured out...

Haha uhhh well the bad news is that HH goes into the TPP stuff very little. This is partly because it would clog up the rest of the story and partly because that stuff was dealt with more in Seiren, the story that comes chronologically before HH. Helix (the little one) plays a much larger role...

Hey there! For our review exchange, I chose A Second Chance since the premise was interesting to me. I'm glad I chose it. Here are my thoughts. Quote Comments bruuhhhh thats so evil I really love the imagery of the lake. The fact that he sees a bear with cubs and doesn't immediately feel like...

Actually, I would argue that trying to go for this many epithets is already not good for the prose. I would much rather read a name and the Pokemon species over and over than have a character referred to by their type when their type has no relevance to the current conversation. For all of my...

Fic Information Title: Hunter, Haunted Summary: Thinking he'd successfully gotten away with yet another ritualistic murder, Ichiro "Red" Akai is shocked to discover his latest victim roaming the earth once more - as a yamask. To keep his crimes from being exposed, he seeks to kill her again...

He actually gets a much larger role towards the end of HH! He even has a extra chapter from his POV that I'll post after the main fic is complete. He's also the human in Whine-Yelp under his first name, Mark. Ah, my bad. Looks like the formatting didn't work as I thought it would. Changed it a...

Hey, here for Catnip, and sorry for the lateness. Figured I'd continue with this story since I'd looked at it before in a previous round. Quote Comments Typo. It feels like you're using "bemused" to mean "amused" here, but that's a common mistake. "Bemused" means "puzzled, confused, or...

a standing ovation for a new record in time between chapters everyone. five months. couldnt have done it without you. no but seriously i do have pretty good reasons for taking so long this time - working on Judgment, working on my contest oneshot, working on another oneshot, summer job...

July 3th Game Organizer: Canis Sign-ups open until Thursday, July 7th 10:00 EST [countdown here] You have until the end of the countdown to submit your fic of choice. You may change it anytime up until the rolling takes place. Submit to me via TR or Discord DM. Review window opens: once...

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It's been a long time coming, but here I am, reading Wandersword! I wasn't sure at first if I was gonna do one chapter or two for this batch, but I really wanted to continue after the first so I read them both. Here are my thoughts. Quote Comments I found it a little strange that this...

Hey there! I read chapter 2 for Catnip, and here are my thoughts. my bet's on dungeon madness! "Suddenly the area all around him took an ominous tone to it" is pretty vague. I'm not sure how I'm supposed to interpret it. Typo in Farfetch'd. Missing capital at the start of the final sentence...

Hey! Read chapter 3, here are my thoughts. weird vistas? pog lol l o f e This paragraph confused me at first, and then I realized that by "slunk" it meant that Hiro had jumped down. To "slink", though, is to "move smoothly and quietly with gliding steps, in a stealthy or sensuous manner" or...

Hey there! Now that I'm no longer busy with the anniversary review challenge, I'm finally here with the review for the last chapter. I wasn't sure how I was supposed to understand this since these two claims seemed to be contradictory. funny image: jungs coat gets caught in the car door and he...

May 8th Game - Happy Mother's Day! Organizer: Canis Sign-ups open until Thursday, May 12th 10:00 EST [countdown here] You have until the end of the countdown to submit your fic of choice. You may change it anytime up until the rolling takes place. Submit to me via TR or Discord DM. Review...