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So, I wonder if the new prologue was written partly in response to Namo's earlier feedback. Adding in something to maybe grab readers' attentions and pull them in. The biggest takeaway is that it's a shady conversation with some shady characters. I think you could've been a biiiit more generous...

Speaking personally, I'm quite bummed with how far into January this blitz has been creeping. I think my personal participation speaks to that. It's just how my schedule works out with work. Entirely in January means I'm, at best, participating in one or two weeks tops. I thought it worked out...

I wonder if Newangle City is actually just a refurbished locale from the main line games. Or, like, all of this setting is actually some bizarro region. Perhaps Unova, given the focus on the Tao trio and Irune being a gen V dragon, too. Maybe this is Castelia City. Or since the ending blurb --...

Chapter 81: On the Wind, Past the Stars Entry 3451 Just seeing Mewtwo again stirred up old wounds I thought had long healed. The cruelty of Team Rocket's boss. Mewtwo's betrayal of my trust. How he hurt me. Broke off a piece of my face. The crystal was still there in his shoulder. Taunting me...

Runs DRAGON.exe to join in the fun. Lightbulbs are dragonic. Jet planes are dragonic. Bigger jet planes are also dragonic. Dogs that can turn into snakes that can turn into transformers are ALSO dragonic.

Chapter 80: A Revaulting Situation These Overseer guys really want me keeping up with these audio diaries. All part of the healing and adjustment process, they say. But healing from what? Leaving my home? Since we struck that deal, I've had time to mentally prepare myself. I knew this would be...

Chapter 79: You Wyndon Some, You Lose Some Two weeks went by in a hazy blur. Perhaps because the outpost buzzed with activity. The monks kept their eyes out for anomalies, but came up empty. Gene and Vegna worked with an Aeon platoon to deal with tracking Necrozma. The only reports so far were...

Glad you liked it. I was sorta aware of the second-person risks and still somehow underestimated the effort it'd need on my part. XP The idea was that, in the lab, their thinking is more mechanical. A sort of binary "black and white," so when something doesn't fit their parameters, it causes...

Glad you enjoyed it. The second-person was definitely tough to write. XP SwSh never explains the who or why behind this silvally existing, but I figured this absolutely sounds like the type of shady thing Rose's megacorp would be up to behind the scenes, so I just rolled with it. It's a good...

In the first half he is processing things more like a machine and it isn't until the helmet's on that his thinking is more... organic. I even made an effort to have the prose reflect this, but avoiding contractions in the first half and then gradually implementing them. I don't think it's ever...

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As promised. This is, of course, a blitz review so it will be my more scatterbrained bullet points. So, let me know if you have any questions. Prologue -Now when you name a character Rufus I must immediately go into :absus: mode as someone who's played FF7 and its Remake. Though given the...

I think there was a bit of improvement here. Far less thought-as-dialogue and the POV seemed mostly centered on Arian. This included during the skirmishes that followed. Which, yes, are mook fights and did still take up a significant chunk of the chapter with the ending already promising us more...

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All right. You want three chapters? I'll give you three chapters. But it's my blitz style. Aka not what you're used to. 15 -Stains on an inn floor are totally water leaks and definitely not any other kind of fluid, bodily or otherwise. [lenny face] -Lyle, beggars literally cannot be choosers...

As promised. I don't think you've seen my reviews before. For these things they tend to be stream of consciousness bulleted points. So let me know if you have any questions. 1 -Interesting decision to skip over the isekai portion itself and just have Solder already having been a quilava for an...

Blitzy New Year! Disclaimer: My blitz reviews are stream of consciousness styled rambles. Let me know if you have any questions. Despite the listing of your influences the summary reads more like the child of Pirates of the Caribbean and Skies of Arcadia dressed in a PMD onesie. Off the bat...

Blitzy New Year! Disclaimer: My blitz reviews are stream of consciousness styled rambles. Let me know if you have any questions. From what I remember last time, there was fire dog gerbil thingy but then Koa was already thinking about his next destination because teen I guess. I am unlikely to...

Chapter 78: Water-Type Under the Bridge Entry 2201 The newcomer has spoken with a couple of Sages. They said it was just simple questions. About the world. About the Sages. About me. Apparently she ran away from her home. Otherwise, she's kept mostly to herself. Something about her aura feels...

Week 1 rec goes to @Inkedust's Pathways of Arcadia. Still in its infancy at the moment, but folks on Discord seem to like the worldbuilding that Inke's put into this so far. For my standpoint, without spoiling the actual content it is a world whose lore is centered around a particular trio of...