Recent content by K_S

chapter 5 i.p. I see snarky narriator is still snarking... chapter 6 i.p.

Chapter 4 i.p. chapter 4 review i.p. I wound up bolding my comments/suggestions because for some reason I cant get the spoiler box to divide up like normal. Your text is in mormal btw. And things deolve into a mad house... and there's only 2 chapers to calm the mad masses... this'll be...

chapter 3 review complete Sorry had to use my phone and cold weather murders my typing.. so youll have to bare w more typos than standard Well he's better at scavenging than pika, figures. Natiator and narrstion feels a bit squishy here. We are swapping from meowths pov, to anime esk...

Chapter 2 review Complete happy holiday! So clarity concern.. the same forest as the might' and zu's planned schenanigans or the same woods as in... jjm and ash and co are cohabiting in the forest as each other, hence why the rival mons are getting a bonding day? Laughs at first line. I...

I'll ease up on the analysis then, unless i see sonethibg confusing lije the mold section... or i spot another 30er, then i figure its fair game! I'll pop chapter 2 up when tine pernits.

Prologue complete Alright, so I shamelessly picked the shortest section to see if an old issue (sentence length) was still present. Before I start poking at the plot/setting/characters, let's see how a more modern work holds up to an old concern? (Alright, I'm halfway in... and it's a...

al in all it sounds interesting. I hope you wrestle your writers block down soon it ll be a fun read.

Out of curiosity was the vicinti's name either peppy or hare? (Keeps reading) nevermind, guess its mood swinger... If we are swinging the duel life bit... you could pull it as alexander being a maladaptive dreamer perhaos? Hes got this little world in his head that gets realer and realer...

It alsonties into the duality of the ninja thing. Between him hiding in plain sight, being support in his r.l. life in a way, ect.

Basically the take away is the human body sleeps (and is very vulnerable) and the spirit/mind takes becomes a wolf (well mon in this case) and does its own thing until the person wakes up.

If we are going for hits hard... and wanna skip flashbacks? Well how about a world collides? Have him be a hero in the mon world and a mundane drifter in the r.l. (perhaps pull a wolfwalkers where he advwntures when he dreams?) and as hus mon adventures get wider and wider and then...

Holy. Overkill much? On a candid note i cant top that, not gunna try, but i will make a shake at responding. So... since this wish is only viable in the 'mon verse lets pop you right over. And heck, i'll even give yoy a prestigous stem job in home sweet kanto. So, thefunny thing about...

Hi here for a review! As a blanket heads up i use my phone to write reviews. As such, my work will be hidden under a spoiler tag (and may take more than one day to be complete... with some typos, it depends) which i will lift (and pm you to tell you i am done) once things are wrapped up. Lets...

Honestly we run a blitz here to celibrate... and thats a but of a "by lucky chance" than premeditated timing thing... Seasonal ficlets used to be a comunity event ran by a forum member (i believe they have stepped down from running that event/being online) but since that went quiet there isnt...

They jumped to here if youre interestrd... https://forums.thousandroads.net/threads/interdimensional-jailbreak-an-rp-campaign.1943/