Review Exchange Thread!

[StolenMadWolf]

Right, since I'm hungry for feedback to make my fic the best it can be, here I go, plus some info on my own feedback.

Title: Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: Guardians of Balance
Summary:
The world is entering a new era. Travel between the continents is easier than ever, the towns are growing ever larger and Pokemon are more closely connected than ever before. The Teams have become more numerous as ever, and have become a symbol of the progress and resilience of the world. However, as a new wave of colonisation spreads to the rapidly rising islands of the seas, tensions rise, threatening to fragment everything apart.

As a new wave of natural disasters begin to spread around the world, a human wakes up to find himself transformed into a Pokemon. Thrown into an increasingly fractured and endangered world, the human known as Sam will find himself thrust into an adventure unlike anything he could ever imagine. An adventure where there is far more than meets the eye...

Currently Guardians of Balance is in it's first episode, and is primarily focused on the events around the Sea of Wonders itself. Deeper worldbuilding will come in future episodes.
Rating: M
Content warnings: There is strong language, strong violence/gore and other potential dark themes including abuse, substance abuse, self harm/suicide, and possible suggestive themes (although the last one will be avoided if possible). I will provide updates and warnings well in advance both here and in a seperate posts.
Word count/chapters on offer: There are currently twenty-two chapters in GoB, compiled into a single episode. That totals out over 80,000 words and that might well top out at 100,000 words by the time the Episode comes to an end (and that is not talking about future episodes). Individual chapters tend to vary in word count, with early chapters being only a couple of thousand words to around 3,500 words max. But starting from Chapter 14 onwards, the chapters have consistently been over 4,000, with the very latest topping out at 8,000.
What feedback I'm looking for: I'm looking at general feedback for the entire fic if possible. However, I can understand how that is a big ask given the size of some of the chapters alone. If you want to offer feedback for specific chunks, that is perfectly fine as well. I would perfer feedback on later chapters, but early chapter feedback is welcome too.
Link: https://forums.thousandroads.net/in...dungeon-guardians-of-balance.1092/#post-55893

Feedback information:
What feedback I can offer: I'm not used to giving out feedback, but I could offer general feedback regarding the fic. I do feel that I tend to be more of a worldbuilder, so I'll often provide comments on the worldbuilding of your fic, but I'll try and point out any details that I notice. I will do my best to be constructive, so even if I make a note of any issues, I'll point out stuff I liked as well.
Preferred types of fics: I tend to perfer PMD stories. As how light or dark they are, I do not really mind provided they are SFW. I particularly like serious stuff that has no shortage of light-hearted moments here and there.
Preferred method of contact: Thousand Roads and Discord are ideal, I'm present on the Thousand Roads discord.
Availability: That is highly dependent on my present circumstances, best to actually get in touch with me first to see how free I am.

 

[Theboxcatgamr]

Title: The great Krungler’s foods and services!

Summary: a regular human man has been living in the Pokémon world for three years and has spent them building reputation in treasure town and making his dream store, the people is he told them he was a rare Pokémon called a “Krungler” and has been avoiding dungeons ever since one of his early dungeon runs went poorly. With the actual human of prophecy finally in town his whole charade and livelihood is threatened. This is the story of his reluctant roll in the prophecy

Rating: T for Too much swearing and also teen

Content warnings: blood use, swearing, narcotic reference,

Word count: 3100 words. As of December 9th

What feedback I’m looking for: Im trying to figure out if the comedic moments are actually somewhat funny and if this is a good prologue, as well as some ideas as where I can take it next. I know some things but that’s 2 chapters ahead

Link: https://forums.thousandroads.net/index.php?threads/the-great-krungler’s-foods-and-services.1306/#post-62942


feedback information: as a speed reader I specialize in blasting through content quickly and efficiently (weather I want to or not), as I’m new I have difficulty picking up flaws in story’s however I enjoy thinking about the plot and story itself and usually can pitch a few ideas for future content (completely optional however. Never forget that in the end it’s your story.)

Preferred types of fics: although I enjoy story’s that involve the author themselves (I find those are usually quite passionate) I can and will read anything you throw in my general direction.

preferred method of contact: Thousand roads, discord, and especially the Thousand roads discord

Availability: immediately until further notice

 

[133TFR33k]

Fic information:
Title: Trading Card Game 2: Doduo Adventures (Complete)

Summary: The protagonist has dueled his way all over TCG Island becoming too famous for people to want to duel, so he creates a deck of nothing but common cards as a handicap to get people to duel him again because playing the Pokemon TCG is the way he makes money for a living even though he also enjoys playing it. It's about his exploits briefly on TCG Island and primarily later on GR Island where he finds himself increasingly wrapped up in events beyond what he could have imagined.

Rating: T (Could perhaps be K instead, but rating T just in case.)

Content warnings: Reactions of gambling addicts to gambling. Mind-replacement without consent. Abduction.

Word count/chapters on offer: Approximately 83,000 words. I would be willing to trade up or down with someone else, but I prefer to avoid things over 95,000 words.

What feedback I'm looking for: I'm looking for feedback on anything the reviewer wants to review or provide feedback on. If the entire review would be critical, I only ask that there be at least something positive in it as well. I prefer feedback that is lengthy because I enjoy reading reactions, fixing errors, potentially implementing ideas from the reviewer, and discussing the feedback and the fic in general. I don't have any expectations regarding how fast one provides reviews but would prefer to know in advance if the next review will take longer than a month. In general, the faster someone provides reviews for me, the faster I will do so for them without sacrificing quality or length of my reviews.

Link: https://forums.thousandroads.net/threads/trading-card-game-2-doduo-adventures-complete.1859/

Feedback information:
What feedback I can offer: I try to do everything I can think of with every review I do. That includes grammar, spelling, reactions, thoughts, feelings, and speculations. I will give it my all to deliver the best most enjoyable/useful feedback I can. I am always open to author preferences for how I conduct my reviews. If there is something you wish me to avoid or something you would like me to try to focus on, just let me know!

Preferred types of fics: My fanfic is about the Pokemon Trading Card Game. No one writes fanfic for that. As such, I am in no position to negotiate on the types of fics I am willing to accept in terms of maturity and genre. My only requirement is that it be a Pokemon fanfic. (It is possible I can make some exceptions to this, but it would be on a case-by-case basis.) I still have preferences though so I will list them, but again, these are not deal-breakers for me: I prefer reviews on fics that have little to no reviews already. Being appreciated is part of my motivation to post reviews and I prefer feedback from the author on them either in PM or as a reply in the fic I prefer fics that have either been completed already or that are getting close to it and expected to be completed soon. If I love reading your fanfiction, I don't want to be in cliffhanger limbo. (Note: I stopped playing the mainline games at HeartGold and have only played the 1st Mystery Dungeon game so I am not familiar with much of the modern Pokemon landscape, but that will not prevent me from accepting a review exchange for something more modern.)

Preferred method of contact: Thousand Roads (you can try to reach me on Discord too but I would rather it be on Thousand Roads)

Availability: Most days of the week except Saturdays. It can vary due to life but I'm very motivated.

Bonus: If anyone is able to and willing to draw any high quality fan art, I would be willing to read and review a fic for that! I'd like at least a couple good bits of art to include in my fic. I have no idea what a fair trade for that would be though and am open to negotiate.

 

[matt0044]

Title: Digi-Tail Fusion: The Forest Zone
Summary: Lisanna Strauss of Fairy Tail is dead. Killed by her brother's attempt at a Full Body Takeover spell gone wrong. She is sorely missed. However, suppose the world she was whisked away to was not Edolas... but something else entirely.

After Elfman's fatal attack, Lisanna finds herself flung into the Digital World where Shoutmon and his ragtag resistance seek to take the fight to Lord Bagra's dark forces. She may wield the Fusion Loader but without her magic or family, is she really up to the task of leading the charge?

The story retells the apparent death of Lisanna with additional material to bridge the gaps and segues it into an adaptation of Digimon Fusion/Xros Wars, an underrated season in my opinion. It is the start of what I hope will be a Canon Convergence sort of story that celebrates the two of my favorite series.

Rating: T

Content warnings: Near death experience, PTSD mention and mourning.

Word count/chapters on offer: Discount the short prologue, 3000 to 4000 words per chapter on average.

What feedback I'm looking for: I am looking for feedback from a fan of Fairy Tail who's either a fan of Digimon or a non-fan. If the latter, I hope to see how you enjoy the crossover with Lisanna as the perspective character.

A non-Fairy Tail fan can interact if only to see how the story comes across with the narration helping fill in the blanks.

Moreover, I hope to see how my character and dialogue writing come across as I fear that I'm not as clever as I think I am in that area.

Link: https://forums.thousandroads.net/threads/digi-tail-fusion-the-forest-zone-pilot.1841/#post-73686

What feedback I can offer: I am often keen to pick up on potential pacing issues such as how paragraph may seem cluttered or how character dialogue might stand to be tightened. I also look for how much the story allows for the reader's interpretation as it can be tempting to have sudden exposition in the narration that feels a bit too lecture-y.

Preferred types of fics: Pokemon, something light, cute, comedic or action heavy. If it's based on something like Pokemon Special or the Anime's version, that will work since the game canon can be terribly flexible. Other fandoms include Fairy Tail, Digimon, Dragon Ball and Higurashi.

Preferred method of contact: Thousand Road messaging.

Availability: Now. Though I might take my time in reading, I hope to reserve time when I can.