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Pokémon A K_S spin on "Pokevillains Villaintine's Challenge"

K_S

Unrepentent Giovanni and Rocket fan
Hello! This is a long-overdue Catnip, for the second prompt of this fic.

Thanks for swinging by.

I have to say that a romance/slightly noir fic involving Giovanni is surprisingly something I haven’t come across before, though given how suave he is, it does follow for the character.

I do like to try new angles, glad you liked my efforts.

Although it seems like this is set in the real world, due to Gio and all his mafia members speaking Italian, and mentioning Italian youth? Not sure how Viridian and Kanto fit into that picture, unless it’s in Kanto Japan or something.

So minor spoilers, but the mon world was once our world. Things went pear shapped, massive social and geological upheval occurred (detailed in prompts "the world" and a plot point in this stories incomplete sequel "companion") so while italy doesnt exist as a country the language and people persist anf most rockets consider themselves gruddging italian expats to kanto.

Its actually considered a social stigma to associate with your pre catasttophe culture in kanto/johto. Dated gauche ect... not that gio cares...

I like that you have Giovanni as a public figure in this world, rather than a more private shadow-figure.

Right now he is, partially under duress part for coverstory. Later events, right before silvers abduction, will coax him to drop the public front.

It’s an interesting take on the character I haven’t seen before, and I think the framing of the story, which starts out by seeing him through the lens of the public and media, helps frame that he doesn’t really have much going on below his pursuits—public or criminal.

In later sections the familgia contact Orn dryly points out to Grace how damn lonely gio was. Part of Graces story arch was to shake gio out of this cycle a bit...

To that end, I also like that the story isn’t so much about him romancing her at first as much as it is this strange game of cat and mouse – she’s basically out to be a thorn in his side, and despite his immense political power and reputation, she manages to keep him on his toes despite also, apparently, being somewhat ignorant of her own power and what she’s messing with.

Nice catch. Grace really has no clue. She gets a clue later and thats explored in further segments... and at first, the point of this fic isnt romance, but more exploring this gatsbyi-am nitch of the mon world. Gio and Graces romantic status take back seat to that.

I also like how you convey the cutthroat tone of the business world that Giovanni exists in, and how he navigates it almost effortlessly. Feels very mafia lol.

Snorts. Well it is, so there is that...

I particularly liked the detail that he likes keeping the streets stable and well-funded, because it’s bad for business when they aren’t.

Pragmaticism thy name is Gio. And it matches his manga persona well. He is, underneith it all, a man very invested in the human condition. Its just that he wants his top dog status to keep his personal assets cozy, and the power to manipulate things for the "better" as he sees fit.


I also like a lot of the background politics; it feels like a very rich world that we only see a little bit of through all Giovanni’s connections and the legal quibbles and companies. To that end, I have to commend you for your effortless, cohesive worldbuilding. Having existing mafia politics to draw from helps a lot here, I imagine!

Glad you liked it. Theres more expansion later in. But this fic gives out a bit of a taste of the scope and shape of things.

The other thing I have to praise is the interactions between Giovanni and Grace; you really do nail their dynamic well and paint characters that seem realistic.

Thank you characterization is a challenge nice to see i naik we it

It does get a bit sitcommy for my taste in places (particularly, the Arcanine scene)

The arcanine scene was a prompt that i plugged in (humor). It was silly, and sitcomish, but it does tie into his work later on when he has to field simular gym flavored jobs like it. The idiot trainer and his moewth caught in a tree becomes something of a running gag in later pieces. And he does stints like it for his public persona, and other fics. (And he hates every second of it)

Some of the sitcomish tho was p.r. manipulating things to make his escapades run like a 'com. He fires them and it does tone down a little.

, and there are times when I feel the story kind of just glosses over major events or doesn’t particularly explain them in full detail, but it is fun to watch them go from fighting each other to helping plan their exit from messy celeb drama (and also become romantic along the way?).

Some of the issue is that this is still i.p.

There were some quick scenes that didnt grt a lot of weight due to it bwing a gio centric piece.

if grace were the main p.o.v. her tipping point would of been the scene in the med lab, where she realizes "yikes there are things wrong w this guy, he's got wounded growlithe vibes like mad", as well as her being scared out her mind adter the paparazzi/zoroak situatiob that gio spends... one line on.

For him its a hohum day to day.

For grace it was a catalyst that made her realize she needs help and gio was the only person who was offering.

I will say that some of the drama feels a tad causal for someone of Giovanni’s calibre, though it seems he might not be the head of Team Rocket at this point, so I can buy him being a bit younger/inexperienced than the version of him we see in Red/Blue.

Gios in a weird place. Hes powerful as a buisnessman amd legally top of his game, in kanto/league and stretching his resources outside kanto for funsies. But in the mob he's middle tier at best. He came from the top but was the unfavored son of the capi de capi, so he has experience with the upper levels, but he had to claw his way from the bottom to where he is now. Hes got a ton of social clout in the system but hasnt got official approval to promote and therefore has to deal w issues on all levels below and above his paygrade.



The biggest thing that pulled me out of the story at points is that sometimes, the prose and dialogue would feel a bit awkward? Sometimes the metaphors just didn’t really land for me (“rabid mightyena” was a good way to describe the press, though “mating (I assume “meeting”) a starved sharpedo” felt a bit unnecessary),

No not meeting. It was mating. Basically it was a nod towards skitty waillord joke. And it was about as wrong as an analogy i could think of to mirror the insanity of the press w a slice of ew, ick and yuck as a side.

nd sometimes there were dialogue choices that seemed overexplainy (“ms ‘too much floof are we channeling a connection today’” is quite the mouthful!) In all these cases, I guess, it felt like these things could have gone—or did go—unsaid, and so the story didn’t really need to lay it out again in the actual text. It’s a minor quibble, though one I feel could have made the prose a bit more elegant.

Fair enough.

There were also just straight-up a lot of misspellings in the text that were distracting. I wonder if this was written on mobile?

Yeah. Without spell check or grammerly. Appologies i'll have to pop a note on the top to warn further victims/reviewers.

I really do love most of the description, though—lines like “There would be a swarm of media comparing it to a banette’s smile. All stiff and dead, with curiously flat eyes” tell me so much about Giovanni in just a single line, and you have a knack for characterful prose and one-liners like that.

One tries. Preens.

I did read everything in the spoiler blocks, though I’m really not sure why they were in there. I initially thought they were author’s notes or deleted scenes or something, but it just seems like the rest of the story? I’m genuinely not sure why it was separated like this.

Basically my phone fries when something is too long. The spoiler blocks let me read it without risk of screen hopping. By the sounds of it you read the first few chapters and the i.p section...

Overall, a fun read! My biggest closing thought is that I think this feels ripe for expansion beyond a prompt, if you wanted

Funny you should mention that. This started as a prompt fill out, but between this and headcanons (another short atory archive) i realized i had enough gio stories to make a series set pre transversal/roost (this giovannis home stories). I'm planning on completing the second drafts in this format. Polishing. And rereleasong them in final format later down the line thats much more concise.

Once i can net some labtop time that is.


– I think you captured your interpretation of Giovanni really well, and you’ve created a lush (if a tad abstract) world that you could expand really well. I liked the Italian mafia inspo a lot; TR is styled after mafia but tends to feel more like a militarized criminal unit than a proper crime ring. As it is, this did feel a little bit muddled on the edges, but gets across the core idea well and tells a coherent story. I would just wonder if it would be worth taking the subsequent parts out of spoiler boxes, since that’s a pretty significant part of the story and some might miss it if they aren’t curious enough to open them.

Great job though, and until next time!

~SparklingEspeon

Thanks for your kind words and kinder review.
 
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Creator of the Doduo Alliance
Location
Somewhere beyond the Nexus
Pronouns
He/him
Partners
  1. doduo
Hey, Kasan!

Here for catnip reviews for:
"prompt one, Fix"
AND
"Villain-times prompt: part 2, companion"
(Uh, I just noticed the thread-mark has "TIMES" instead of "tines". There are a few other thread-marks that do that too. Just FYI. 😅)

Let's get started!

Total review word count: 1,925
Word count for part 1 (including spelling errors): 1,051
Word count for part 2: 874

Fix/ a fix/

definition:
General: to repair something or hang something.
Slang: a dose of illegal drugs
Mob slang: to commit murder
Glad you define it here. I'm guessing I would be confused without it.

Most didn't know, but Giovanni Sakaki was skilled in more than the Famiglia Business. It'd started as a spark of idle curiosity, one of his infamous, dreaded, why questions uttered at dinner.

Why were they having to eat out here on the lawn and not in the dinning room?

His stupidity had been noted by one and all. Cat calls and jeers about how scemo he was, how the Mad'am had dropped him on his head... Wasn't it obvious, the fucking plumbing had gone crazier than a golbat outta hell and...
I don't know, why were they eating on the lawn and not in the dinning room? Were they having a bbq?

That seems a bit too tame for what I expect though... Also, I expect Giovanni was smarter than that, so I doubt that is it.

I guess it could depend on what age he was at the time. What age WAS he here, I wonder?

And fumbling through a language he should of been taught over his craddle and hadn't.
Italian? Or are we talking Kantonese here?

Managing to squeak out one more why question before some Aunt had hushed him with a smack upside the head.

"Why don't we fix it, we got tons of fixers?"

He'd been told they weren't that type of fixers, smacked, and ordered to keep his head down and his mouth shut.

Which he did, but still, he wondered.
What is going on here? Was the dining room table broken? Is that why they are eating outside? Was there mafia business being conducted in the dining room for privacy? I get that him casually throwing around the word "fixer" could be a problem since it could pertain to murder, but I don't understand what it is he is expecting to fix.

Xxx

What started as curiousity was fanned into a blaze by sheer irritation.
Curiosity misspelled

Unfortunatly mob carelessness and repeat frusteration had driven Giovanni to master basic piping and maintinance. Despie all the stereotypes, he learned to spite noth Nona and the Madams networks. If they weren't anle to come in to work it was harder for them to plant things in his house. Be it bombs or bugs.
Spelling errors: "Unfortunately", "frustration", "maintenance", "Despite", "north"?, "able"

So they were spying on him through a variety of means and by learning some handyman skills he was able to do his own work instead of hiring a false plumber or whatnot?

His passion project had inspired his familgia to gift him all sorts of red hats. He'd burned them. Especially the ones mongrammed with an "m".
"monogrammed"

Passion project? Of what, acting like a plumber? Is a red hat something plumbers steriotypically wear?

What's wrong with the letter "m"? Is it standing for Madam or something? Maintenance maybe?

His talents, were a blessing at Nona's, and a curse here.

This was the fifth fucking time his room mate had poured grease down the sink. Did the moron think that the magical drain clefairies were going to skip down mount moon and fix things for him?
Is his room mate doing it on purpose? Why, if so?

Based on Giovanni's reaction, it sounds like his room mate just does it because they don't care that it messes the sink up and Gio doesn't want the sink getting clogged so he keeps fixing it... sounds like a good way to end up on the wrong end of a deadly mon attack... :copyka:

The last was snarled, out loud, at the guilty grease dumping party, who had no craps to give, and his bored monotone showed it.
Ah, so it IS a matter of apathy!

"Look man," Fabio, a dullard even by mafioso breaker standards hovered over him. Passing down tools to the biggest tool of a roommate he'd ever had. "It's not like we aren't made of money, make a call, cough up some dough...."
Wait so the roommate IS fixing the sink, not Gio?

I came back to this later and realized that Fabio IS the roommate and from his perspective, GIO is the tool since Gio is fixing the sink? Is that it?

"It'll be handled in house." The only nice thing about Fabio was you didnt have to make lame excuses. Truth could be told. "You know that, I know that. Even if we pay double to get an ousider to do the work, they'll get intercepted..."
"didn't", "outsider"

Ok, so I think all this here is Gio's dialogue.

"So?"

"Bugs, you dumb... I do not want to spend three hours combing through our things for fucking bugs!"

Because if he did, he was throwing the lanky man's things out the second story window. Again. The fall would shake off the dust if nothing else.
Obviously having bugs is NOT preferred, but who is trying to plant bugs in his living space and why?

Fabio yawned, a few heavy steps were heard, and the fridge door clicked open. Chewing ensued.

"Ish 'ow th' f'ks show th' 'are."

Care? The man was clearly more brainwashed then a mareep. And brain damaged. It was a thin concolation but first semester would likely see this dumbass to the curb due to bad grades.
"consolation"

Ok it took a bit, but i decrypted the 'mouth full' speech: "It's how the folks show they care."

Gio does NOT find that 'care' to be endearing! 😅

Considering 'roommate' and 'grades' it appears this is during Gio's college days.

Shame it couldnt be sooner.
"couldn't"

Giovanni grit his teeth. Counted to ten, twice, then decided to take a break. Wrench clenched in his hands, squirming back and out, the first sight beyond pipes and cobwebs was of the (regretibly)
"regrettably"

familiar form of a man who sort of knew what a shower was. The man was wearing an oversized "GO Tauros" shirt, and boxers, and about a half weeks worth of grease atop his head.

It was the sight of the pizza in the bastards hand froze Giovanni as if he'd been ice beamed to the spot. Oblivious, chewing like the cow his shirt advertized him to support, Fabio looked down at him, long features stamped with obvious boredom.
"advertised"

"Whash y'r," a loud swollow, "problem Sakaki?"

The problem? The leftovers were from a box clearly labeled as his.
Oh... THAT'S what's going on! At first I thought it was because he was eating while Gio was fixing the sink. Which now it seems Gio IS fixing the sink! I guess that means he was fixing it before too.

Before he could even begin to express his anger at the theft the pipes rattled. The grimmer, when it reared up out of the sink, was as nausiating as they came.
"nauseating"

Marked with chickenwing bone spines, egg shell armor that crinkled with every move, and a pen and some papers rising out of its back like a half crumpled fin. It was half 'mon half grease ball, and a complete night mare.
They have grimers in the pipes??

It was also proof that Fabio had no fucking clue how to use the god damned garbage disposal. Fabio managed to both multitask and lower himself in Giovanni's admitibly abysmal regard for the man. Screaming and puking, the lankey man staggered back, agog in panic and nausia.
"admittedly" "lanky" "nausea"

Wow that is QUITE the reaction! :wowzard:

Of course the grimmer absorbed the half digested meal with a sloppy trill.

Scrambling to up, wrench in hand, Giovanni managed a few good swings with his off hand, while using the other to call campus security. If Fabio got clipped in the ensuing maddness... well it was all heat of the moment.
"madness"

Xxx

Suffice to say the university president was not pleased to have two predominent
"predominant"

mafioso members in his office first week in. Small blessings be, there were no bodies. Greater blessings, the Fabio boy's family had paid a garchomp's ransom to keep things hush hush.
I guess the college is in cahoots with the mafia. Makes sense considering the connections one would expect the mafia to have.

The younger, some kid named Sakaki, had had no patron swan in to pay his dues. So by economic casualty the boy was going to be the patsy. The president had had the younger boy go through all the motions.
"had" x2 looks weird even if it technically works. I believe you can remove one and keep the same meaning.

Oh... oh no... Gio gets the blame for the Grimer incident when it was due to his roomates apathy and he was the one FIXING the mess? As soon as Gio gets out... Well, Fabio, it was nice knowing you... :unquag:

Locked in the campus holding cell, parents called, then once apathy levels were established, the young man had been hauled in by campus security.

The campus president had already seen the Fabio's out, by the sound of raised voices both mobsters had seen each other, and there'd been some verble rough housing.
"verbal"

Rich mocking poor. Slurs. Evil preying on evil, that sort of thing.

But that wasnt his buisness, and the Fabio's money was squirreled away in its proper accounts.
"wasn't" "business"

As far as the President was concerned, all was well.

The Sakaki boy was... rather underwhelming. Sporting a fresh shinner. More knees and angles
"angles"? or did you mean "ankles"?

topped with a mop of short cropped black hair. His clothes were mercifully at the campus laundry, being scrubbed within an inch of thier lives.
"their"

Sakaki's borrowed attire was swipped from a school gift shop and that fee was going to be added under the "damages and expenses toward college property".
"swiped"

Set out in its proper place, front and center, were expulsion papers. The list of accumilated fines and charges,
"accumulated"

and a pen for the boy to scrawl his name upon it all. The confessions would be legally binding, and the money due wired in its proper place once things were said and done.
So he is going to be asked to admit to doing wrong that he didn't do?

Burn it down, Gio! :screm: These are the kinds of moments villains are MADE for!

"Do you understand why you're here young man?" After all, might as well go through the motions.

"I understand," The young man's voice was a study of pure rage, and he had that growling tone that made a quiet voice carry. Shame he hadnt
"hadn't"

shown a lick of interest in theater, he'd of had a knack. Rubbing his wrists where cuffs had been, the young man flicked his dark eyes on the papers. "That my roommate's habbits caused every pipe on wing A to spawn grimer."
"habits"

Oh wow! So more dorms were impacted than just his!

Silence, as the President smoothed his festures to not let a lick of amusement show.
"features"

"Mon will do as mon will. Thats the nature of beasts.
"That's"

Path of least resistence and all that."
"resistance"

Pointedly the President set his pen on the table. Waited as comprehension dawned. Pale hands snatched the papers, flipped through them, as black eyes flicked over each line like a pair of startled deerling, skatting over each cause, clause, and bill. As if speed would shield him from the consequences.
"skating"

So he is reading something that is making him realize he messed up big time?

At first I wasn't sure what actions were being taken by who, but I think with it menitoning the president at the start, I can assume this entire paragraph was things that ONLY he was doing.

"You're a mad man," near hysterial, Sakaki looked up at the President, eyes bugged. "Do you have any idea who I am?"
"hysterical"

This seems like a big moment for Gio here.

"I understand that in buisness circles your mother is feared. You also need to understand, before you begin any postering, she was... disinterested... in intervening."
"posturing"
Wait, so now the president is NOT afraid? Gio did NOT have a big moment? Why is the president's reactions flip-flopping?

Disinterested was a mild term to describe the sheer utter scorn she held for her boy's academic future. Exercising a smidge of kindness, the President did not disclose exactly what mother had said about offspring. He also had not recorded this meeting despite her stating the only thing she regretted was not being able to personally see "widdle Giani's world fall apart".
Sounds like a wholesome mother...

"Any protections you think you harbor are not." Best he state that planely.
"plainly"

Least the boy get lethal ideas about help that wasn't coming. "So I advise, most strongly, that you sign without fuss. There is a payment plan for the fees, with a twenty five percent interest, if you can't pay it all upfront. Page nine-"
Oh this scene pushes all kinds of buttons. Being blamed for something that isn't your fault is some serious rage inducement. I'm looking forward to whatever Gio does now...

"He started it. You can't ignore that he was dumping my papers into the garbage disposal. Pouring greese, writing supplies, fucking around with the toilets in the womans dorms...."
"grease" "woman's"?

Gossip had spread like wild fire yet again. Really details like that were normally only known between the guards and thier growlithe partners.
"their"

And normally the staff here was discrete. The President made a mental note to talk to the head of security after this...

Because how had this slip of a man heard anything about the Fabio boy's other acts considering he'd been incarcerated during the peak of the plumning disaster... that was a mystery that needed to be sussed out.
"plumbing"

Fast.

There were more secrets here than one frat boy's schenanigans.
"shenanigans"

And here, all secrets needed to be kept least they lose thier tenious
"their" "tenuous"

agreement with the Viridian Mob that guarenterd
"guaranteed"

staff saftey for educating the criminal's offspring.
"safety"

Guaranteed safety sounds like it might be a threat of some kind. "Hey... bub... you DO want our protection... RIGHT?"

Clearing his throat, the President folded his hands in front of him. Attempted to loom, without getting up. At his age getting up and down were only to be persued when absolutely nessescary.
"pursued" "necessary"

"The Fabio's have been handled. All things between them and this facility are squared away, you however..."

"Fuck you." The brat tossed the papers down. "You know what he did, and I'm the patsy because my mother is a deadbeat bitch?!"
In a nutshell.

"You will calm down and sit down or security will be called and you will be escorted back to a cell. What state you are in when you're picked up by the real police will be concurent with your complience."
"concurrent" "compliance"

Silence, as old man looked down at the younger. Slowly, the scowl of rage crumpled. The young man folded into himself, slumping into his arms, quick enough that the President wasn't sure if he'd imagined the wetness around the young man's eyes, or not.

Masking his face, shoulders shaking, Hate born compsure long gone, Sakaki croaked. "You know... I thought by going here, I was getting out."
"composure"

Wow, so he wanted out. That's a neat bit of backstory!

"You can't get out," the President sighed. "No one does."

Reaching out, he patted the young man's shoulder.

He'd seen this often enough. Children who'd held on, scrambled and scrapped with a ghost of morals and decency, thinking education would set them free. They shattered, each in thier own way, when they found out the one place that'd take them wasn't the escape they wanted.
"their"

Sounds like the president is as trapped as the students?

There were no anti-racism laws in Kanto, or Johto. No checks. No balances. No documentation. And because of that, so many Italians were destitute. Overlooked for any type of employment because they might have connections to the mob.

Supposedly far flung Galar boasted some social progress. Mandates that prohibited firing for being Italian. But Galar was so far away it might as well be another world, rather than another region. And Johto and Kanto had enough
history with the Italy disporia and thier mob ties that thier refusal to deal with them was considered by the masses to be justified.
"their" (twice) "diaspora"

Sad state of things.

Even a form of self defense.

"Let go of me."

The president did so, picking up his pen, tapping it on the desk. A mute warning. He wasn't here to be the young man's counciler. Just here to collect a signiture, funds, and move on with his day.
"counselor" "signature"

Finally, with a shaky breath, Sakaki straightened. Scraping tough looking hands over his face with a watery sigh. Smoothing his hair back with a grumble.

The mute, nothing to see here, was pathetic, but understandable.

"I'm going to give you one shot to do the moral thing." Sakaki warned, voice gritty with frusteration and aborted tears. "You make this disappear, move me to a different dorm, and nothing happens."
"frustration"

Ah, he hasn't given up yet, it seems. Good. What will he do?

Pathetic and delusional.

Lips curling into a sneer, the President ordered. "You sign now, or I call the guards. You have five minutes."

Younger stared down at elder. Face still, eyes redlined, hands clenched together. Refusing to move, speak,barely breathing. Finally, tired of it all, the President reached for his phone. Fingers one inch from pressing on the old fasioned keyboard, he froze, nothing dialed, when Sakaki spoke.
"fashioned"

"The bottem cabniet, right hand side, has a false bottom.
"bottom" "cabinet"

Inside is a special custom cocktail tailored to both your allergies and heart medicines. You're an expensive man to provide for, since you're allergic to most generic fillers. You have two pouches, supplied on the regular. One is an off orange color thats an asphoradic."
"that's" "aphrodisiac"?

"Which isn't a crime. If i had something like that in my posession."
"possession:"

Unmoved by the President's deflection, Sakaki carried on, thin lips quirking into a cruel smirk.

"While it's understandable for a man your age to have performance issues and you not wanting the embaressment of going through open channels for your fun times...
"embarrassment"

It's the other bag that's the kicker. The contents are quite the mix. A bit of this and that... Basically it's a memory inhibitor and asphoradic...
"aphrodisiac"

It has a slow release, twelve hours for both, that build so its victim might just thinks they're sick, a little loopy, then the lust kicks in atop the confusion... Someone might have an afternoon meeting with you, feel sick after hours, and be on the cusp of a confused chemical born break down by nightfall. Mind degrading, body wanting..."
Wow what a piece of garbage this 'president' is. Something tells me he is about to deserve whatever is coming to him.

This is certainly one way to write a villain character. Have them go after other villains for being just as bad or worse.

The president swollowed, eyes flicking anywhere where but the young man, thin hand clenching.
"swallowed"

"Then, the twist. A paralictic chaser to keep them from getting away while you take the master dorm keys in hand, follow them to thier room, and help yourself to the first bag."
"paralytic" "their"

Oh wow, the fact that this happening on a college campus must mean he does it to the STUDENTS!

Silence, the President slowly, carefully cradled the phone. Fingers hovering.

"You're lying. And delusional. I call for help and you never step foot in this place again."

"Thats one option. But I have contacts in the drug buisness.
"That's" "business"

Maybe once academia doesn't work out... I can go back to those roots. I'm a fairly good chemist, aced AP, you can check yourself. With my skills I could easily get into manufacturing custom orders. But I'm sure a man of your moral fortitude would never need to worry about any additives. Your stash is just a hold over from your sowing your wild oats days. A semtimental... curiousity."
"sentimental" "curiosity"

Huh... I wonder what Gio's angle is here?

The phone was set down.

"I took thier money, you can't go back. Those were the terms."
"their"

"I wonder," shuffling the papers, stacking them neatly, Sakaki considered causes and clauses of his expelling with a smirk. "if there's been a few investigations... Mob and otherwise... If you've left any traces of your indulgence on your victims. How would those mafisio families react, knowing you've been raping thier kid's friends and allies?"
"their"

Ah, so there we go.

Face turning an intriguing shade of grey, eyes wild, the old man looked at the younger. Trembling in his seat.

"Tell me, Mr. President," the fake disinterest fell away, as Sakaki lifted his gaze to meet the old mans eyes. "Have you ever laid hand on anyone in the familgia?"

The man's whole body flinch said worlds.

"Interesting, well since we're done here and this is all harmless chit chat, I'll just sign these and..."

The pen was snatched and tossed aside. The papers were ripped away, ripped up.
Wow Gio got him GOOD there! :wowzard:

"I think Viridian University would be.. honored..." the old man swollowed,
"swallowed"

clearly choking down on puke. "To keep someone of your... ah pedigree... around, as long as you see fit."

"Are you stating I could get access to unlimited classes, no charge, for however long I want?" Eyebrows hopping in surprise the young Rocket looked genuinely interested.

He'd also looked friendly earlier, whem rattling off the contents and processes of the bags.
"when"

With an offer like that, Gio could learn all SORTS of things!

The President was uninclined to trust anything form this young man.

Smiling a sickly grin, the older man nodded. "We do have scholarships for a reason Mr Sakaki."

"Well dont let me slow you down, go ahead and toss something together on paper. We can do the signing right now. No time like the present."
"don't"

Good ol Gio. Turning a bad situation into an opportunity.

And there was something sharp in the man's smile, something acidic to his psuedo bubbliness.
"pseudo"

But once it was signd and sealed,
"signed"

legally binding, and swept away (Sakaki prefered the night classes, a win for both the President and Fabio both, less chance for encountering him)
"preferred"

the President lived in fear for a month, maybe two. But time distanced him from that threat.

Sakaki was a typical mobsters son, indifferent to morals once his needs were met. He lived and let live. And that had been a relief. There'd been this girl, then a boy. Both so sweet, all young and innocent...

Then come winter holiday. There'd been a friend, of a friend, of a Mob family. Brought along on a legitimate scholarship, she'd taken her celibration with the staff, and few lingering students.
"celebration"

Sakaki had been there, but been distant. An apathetic guest and a guard to no one. Content to settle into a nook, scan the room, and indulge in the free food.

Out of sight out of mind, the President was content to let things be. He had a fresh dose from a new shipment and mixed it into the unsuspecting thing's water. And she left, never knowing what she drank, wandering off caterwal silly tunes with some carolers before deciding to go home. He'd followed a few hours later, orange baggie in hand.
"caterwal"? Not sure what that is.

He'd dose, then slip in. experience told him he'd have twenty minutes to set things up... Taking a draw, he shuddered, familiar pins and prickles teasing his nose and mouth. But when it started to burn, literally burn, he realized what had happened. His newest dose had been tampered with. He couldn't even scream, his airwars
"airways"

smoldered and he choked on the damaged flesh. Then a paralitic kicked in, pinning him in place, leaving him to his slow smoldering death in the snow.
"paralytic"

Quite the poetic demise.

He was found by pre dawn clean up. His body whisked away to be dropped into the sewer system. After all, what was another death but just another secret to be swept away. A few flicks of the key board and a post holiday sabatacial was declaired, the man stepping down via email due to health concerns, and none were the wiser.
"pre-dawn" "sabbatical" "declared"

Wow, yeah they have a whole system in place for sweeping things under the rug. Yikes!

Closing thoughts for part 1:
So, it seems the point of this was a few things.

1. To show where Gio got his extensive education in various things.

2. To remind us that even back then, Gio was a villain. (although, one might argue he was more a pragmatic vigilante than he was a villain) Either way, well-written character that the narrative did a good job of getting me on his side.

3. The world at least has a side of it that is massively messed up.

Villain-tines challenge,

Prompt: Companion, part 2
Huh, I wonder who the "companion" is supposed to be? I assume it's not Fabio... :mewlulz:

Summary:
Acquiring a companion to weather one's life... was quite the process.
Let it not be said Giovanni Sakaki made it easy on himself....
Hmm... not easy, but in what ways, I wonder?

Or, when a young up-and-rising political personality and Made Man, Giovanni Sakaki, meets, and then butts heads with the irascible Nurse Grace Evens, things start rockily, and slowly get worse from there.
"rockily" I think maybe you meant "rocky"

When most saw Giovanni he was alone.

And that statement, while true, was an utter contradiction to his physical reality.
Nice way of opening. Says a lot clearly but with few words!

When at his legal work, he was usually surrounded by the best and brightest of Viridian Corp.
Comma here, I think? (I added it in bold)

The eye of an economic storm on the office floor, he corralled scientists and businessmen and coaxed both to follow his vision with a smooth grace. His charisma and biting humor had derailed a multitude of international incidents, as he charmed his way into other Regions markets.
This is one of the coolest descriptions of a villain I think I have seen. Makes a compelling case for Gio as a character. :eyes:

And when he wasn't working his legit companies, he was working. And in that business, there were guards, aides, and consigliere at his side explaining the local Game in play and each made men's angles. As an Executive there had to be a legion of men at his beck and call.

Because he kept his fingers on the criminal pulse points of Johto, Kanto, Tojho, and the Isles. His title may have meant advisor, but his job was a mix match of traveling fixer, financial streamliner, and spy for the Matriarch and Don's Council back home.
This really gives some scope and specifics for what Gio does and is responsible for. Excellent context.

Most of his work was political. But when rebellion or incompetence spawned the lingering touch and observation became a stranglehold. Death for those who displaced the Dons was a quick wrench that ended in a snap.
I feel like the last two sentences used to be a run-on but you split them up in a way that didn't quite work. I'm not entirely sure what I would do to fix it without turning it into a run-on again. The main problem is the 2nd to last sentence. It starts with "But when" but it never lets us know the conclusion of that thought within the same sentence. "But when this happens then this happenes" is what I expected the structure to be.

As a trainer, and then gym leader, he had a tamed beast at his side at all times. He wasn't the stereotypical "mon person" by any means. They followed as he led, no questions asked.
He is the strongest Kanto gym leader AND his badge (at least in the games) commands obedience of mon of any level.

Physically Giovanni Sakaki was never alone.

And as far as the world was concerned, he was always alone. It was a well-known fact that he had no affection for 'mon, man, woman, or child.
Hmmm what about persian?

Political gossips moaned in sympathy for the arm candy he swept through events. There were no perks, no longevity. Each event had a new woman. And while some kissed and told, the "good time" was solely in the bedroom. The "charm" was being in the company of a man who held up to old-time niceties like pulling out a chair, and flattering a woman from crown to toe, making her feel like a princess.

But one and all warned, there was nothing of depth to it. Any form of attachment on the lady's side, or a call from work, led to being abandoned at best.
Sounds like Bruce Wayne if he took things to the bedroom too.

So when Viridian's newest curiosity, a woman who'd won the lottery twice hit the scene... there was a very serious and somber decision being made through Viridian's upper-echelon party scene.

"To warn, or not to warn".
Winning the lottery twice though... has anyone in the real world ever done that? I'd have to imagine if they did, it could ONLY be by rigging the system somehow. I'm assuming everyone thinks she rigged it.

The Sakaki oligarch was between pretty things, and she was the newest thing about. But surely she knew. Sakaki's exploits were bandied about in all the tabloids. There were gossip sites. A mock support center for women he'd ditched. Another was for women despondent because they were struggling to find a man as rich and skilled.

After her first outing, she'd been pried away from the arm of a tottering attachment, bemused by the pushy questions and interviewer's gaudy bow tie.

The transcript from the interview made top sales and was printed like a banner across every gossip rag.
Ah, so tabloids took an interest in interviewing her. Figures.

"Was she enjoying herself?"

Well, the view was interesting... And it certainly beat the red-eye shift in pediatric ICU.

"How do you feel about being one of the few women who haven't had the Sakaki experience? Intimidated? Excited?"
One of the FEW? Over the top much? Ah, but it IS a tabloid after all...:mewlulz:

She blinked, silver eyes wide, and expression a bit lost.

I'm sorry, the what now?

The media-feeding frenzy had the restraint of a rabid mightyenna... mating a starving sharpedo. Sanity and rational weren't even a starting point and the regular reporting baselines like decency were abandoned.
Well, yeah... I guess that's a tabloid for you. :unquag:

Interviewers adored her at first.

Need a fluff piece, grill Grace Evens and you get a satirical whose who. Initially, she had tried to guess, but after one round when both host and victim realized that besides a few pop singers and artists, she really had no clue who was who, it was dropped.
They were asking her who various celebrities are?

Her reactions turned sarcastic and dryly catty.
I'm not sure what this means exactly, so hopefully there will be an example below.

Grace's reaction to how she was taking in the scene devolved into a running commentary-

"Well, Mrs. "Too much floof we are channeling a confection today" is settled besides with Mr. "I killed x many rare mon to look like a Christmas card" right over there. Look at their hands.. do you see? Yep, I see rings! Do you think they're married to each other, or someone else?"

The interviewer, who was trying not to die, shook his head, wheezing. "Can't answer that one, on the clock."
I feel so lost on this bit. What's going on... 😅

"Ohh one of those situations, nice. Well, I need to reattach to Dr. Swinburn, he gets lonesome you know. Have a good night..."

"Wait.. just, a second. So officially, gotta ask. Your real thoughts on, you know, the event hosted by Gio Corp."

"Again, what is with this Sak-whoever putting his mits on everything?" Grace rolled her silver eyes.

"Well, he is the man running this event..."

"Greg, sweetie, I'm sorry but the Viridian Institute of Medicine, Pediatric Trauma Relief is running things. Some fat cat Viridian is renting the building out to us to tick an "I did charity" box on his upcoming taxes for a break. We had a nice venue set up at a park, but you know the upper class and their sensibilities..."
Ok so the event is for the medical institute and they were going to have it at a park, but Gio stepped in and provided an upgraded venue which Grace assumes was to tick a charity box. Is that it?

Dr. Swinburn, walking stick clicking a mad staccato beat as he approached, was revealed at the end of the interview to be-

  1. A) Her boss, a lower director at Viridian General
  2. B) Scrambling to get over to do damage control
  3. C) Rather athletic for a seventy-nine-year-old.
Xxx​
Is this a multiple choice question for the READER?! Or is this a list of things that are all correct? Did Grace say some things that made them look bad? I suppose she isn't talking about Gio in a very positive light. Perhaps that's it?

Emboldened by their near brush with ligation-worthy broadcasting, the same interviewer approached Giovanni.

Partnerless, and perhaps expecting a familiar gentle ribbing about it, he flicked his black eyebrow at the lanky reporter. BizBroadvasting was notoriously fluff-centric. He'd toss a few lines, they'd leave

Simple as that.

But this one was curiously flushed and a bit wound up. Still, steady regard and the eyebrow rise was a mute "What do you want?", for him. It was a bonafide Sakaki-friendly interaction.

"So Mr. Sakaki, can you please confirm the newest rumor, that your covering the rent for this facility is used to give Gio Corp a free pass to file for the Charitable Tax Break Act 1045-a?"
Ah... look what you did, Grace. Stirring up crap for Gio!

Silence, and a long moment where Sakaki stared at the man and camera, unblinkingly. Finally, indulging a deep breath, he carefully put down his scotch. His black and red ring clinked as one digit chased a drop about as he gathered his thoughts.

"I'm sorry, where did you hear this?"

The previous interview was replayed, and to the familiar woman's image, Sakaki smiled.

There would be a swarm of media analysts comparing it to a banette's smile. All stiff and dead, with curiously flat eyes.
Gio seems quite perturbed here. :mewlulz:

"While less moral individuals need coercion to help the needy," he waved to encapsulate the rich and elite about him, carrying about thier business. Drinking and partying the night away. "Well, I try to be a better man. The tax break was calculated by my finances team, and Viridian co' has grand plans with the windfall."
"their"

By the way, I'm noticing this part has far less spelling errors!

Oh! Such a political answer! Making it look like he will do charitible things with the money and without actually telling a lie!

Grand plans to pocket it, and those would stand.
Yep! :mewlulz:

"Why last event I donated the anticipated tax break to aspiring Italian youth in need. There are a fine string of charities off the mainland, run by Ionic Industries,"

It was a lie from first to last.
Oh, and here I thought he was just telling the truth in a way that was technically true but far from what it sounded like.

aka "donated to young Rocket Grunts who needed money to buy equipment for their next Rocket assignment"

Ionic was an old shell industry run by the Sakakis for generations. Nona's sister, donna Mary ran it with an iron fist and there was nothing fine about her. She was a bit of a drama queen though and would likely appreciate the attention, move to twist it to lure saps into sending money her way without having to work for it.

He'd call this little speil an early birthday gift for the old honchkrow next familgia meeting, kill two birds with one stone.
Getting multiple things done at once. All of this improvised by him too! Nice way of showing him capable!

"I called them well in advanced, set things up, and made sure every penny would be used to assist needy families get their children through college..."
"advance"

All of Maria's children had been unrepentant dropouts. The oldest had been held back five times in his academic career. There was an edge to his smile as he nattered on, one that Greg Preston noted if his sudden pallor meant anything.

Perhaps seeing his life flashing before his eyes, Greg squeaked out the appropriate yes noises.

"Though, personally, Mr. Preston was it?" Greg nodded madly " I would hesitate to take the word of a woman inclined to overindulge in drink at these things."
Ooo! Gio served that ball back to Grace there! :mewlulz:

He couldn't have pulled off tragic now if his life depended on it. So he settled for a smug smile and hoped the fool would interpret it as inviting.

"It's how we met you know. Poor thing. Lost in her cups and woes after being propelled into her social betters. Evens definitely isn't a reliable source for these .... frivolous social justice comments. I'd expect a man with your training to know better."
Having a fight via proxy reporter. Yeah, I guess that fits. :mewlulz:

Flinching at the rebuke, seeing and reading all the malice quite correctly, the reported gulped.
"reporter"

"Right then, well thank you for your time, Mr. Sakaki."

"Anytime." Giovanni drawled. "Glad to clear things up."

XXX​

It took a week for the next, to quote Ms. Evens, "rich person shiding" to pick up.
"shiding"? should it be "shindig"?

And surely the host was hesitant to send along an invite. Not inviting a Sakaki for anything was in most circles social (if not actual) suicide, and Grace could be charming... in an unsubtle way.

Both would be adults. Grace was notoriously compassionate under all her bark. Surely she would keep her head down, make light conversation, and move on. Let the sleeping dogs lie.
So the host pretty much is forced to invite Gio and Grace has been an important social justice activist or some such to where the host would feel behooved to invite her as well? The host doesn't want to because of the way the two interact with each other? Is that it?

"What do you mean Greg got fired!"

The whole room tipped towards the interview nook where Grace's voice rang out. Forget earwigging, a few of the more athletic up-and-coming were perching on chairs, eager to see the explosion in real-time.

Giovanni took a sip of his drink, unsurprised and unbothered. Waiting for the howled tirade that would be the cue to have Grace Evens hauled out. She was a predictable girl, and this bait was laid out to hit all her triggers.
Oh so Gio is trying to push her buttons here.

"Alright," Grace's voice carried, not because she'd fallen prey to her passion, but because all music and talking had stilled. And until she hit her truly spectacular upper ranges, the Rocket was content to leave her be.

He could afford to look like a gentleman, He'd leave her be, let the lady of the hour dig her own social grave, and never have to see her again.
Socially ruthless, but presumably effective in most situations. I get the feeling Gio will fail here though...

In a mute toast, in celebration to her being gone, he indulged another smoke-flavored sip, and waited. Very much the picture of the Persian who'd gotten the cream.

"What can you tell me, without getting fired?"

That was an odd inquiry. Giovanni flicked an eyebrow up. A Made Man among the servers met his eyes and shrugged. A mute, "damned if I know, Boss".

Well, that was interesting. Giovanni was surprised that the media spokesperson would dare explain anything. Daring to try to keep a secret, it was downright ballsy.
Sounds like Grace got some interesting info that Gio hadn't expected her to get!

Especially with how overt he'd been in destroying Greg Preston's career..

There were whispers, as the interviewer explained... something... Unfortunately, the explanation didn't carry. He'd have to peruse the media channels after this party and see what had been said.

See how far the reporter had dared to go after slipping his leash.

"Alright, I can work with that." While a bit elevated, Grace's voice wasn't in the range to warrant a scene. He waved a hand, and since this was technically his party, the music thrummed to life. His men among the staff got into position as Giovanni settled into his chair, deciding that if her words carried over the song, it would be time for her to go.

Showing some restraint, Grace Evens didn't cause a scene. And when she wasn't doing so, the woman was very much a case of out of sight out of mind. After a while, Sakaki called off his men, stood, and resigned himself to the tame enjoyment of socializing with his lessers.
So, Grace managed to not get dragged out, but only barely. Seems realistic for this kind of thing to be able to work as Gio and Grace are two very different sorts of people. Probably too different in most realities.

It wasn't all that bad. He enjoyed his wine, nettling a few rivals, and the woman about were an artwork.

He alternated his small pleasures with the company of small men. Tolerating the boasting of businessmen bragging about 'mon they could control, their brats, and cars, all with a patented "friendly" smile that was soft enough to avoid comparisons to a banette.

The night came and went, and he'd woken as he always did after these stupid things, mildly drained, and not looking forward to his work obligations.

Technically it wasn't like anyone knew he hadn't overindulged. He could use a hangover as an excuse to be a bit late. It wasn't like management could fire him or something.

Between an unseasonably chill in the air and his late night, he indulged an odd lethargic morning. Sauntering about, making breakfast, taking the time to train his team.
Ah, so he stayed up late to chat with Grace to the point where he is using a potential hangover excuse to get some more sleep and not be in a rush in the morning. Smart.

Repast done, nursing his morning pre-work cup, he decided to break with his norms. There was a small mystery to unravel, last night's aborted scene was still teasing his interest. So he skimmed over sections of the paper he'd never bother with, and when he found the transcript of Grace Even's rant...

He nearly choked to death on his coffee.
Wow so this will be something that can truly unnerve Gio. That's a first!

Per the descriptive text she'd been seething. Lips pressed into a thin line, tone a hiss, teeth clenched. He might have feared for his life had he been in grabbing range of her. Luckily she'd kept away. And there was no way in hell she could get to him now.

"You want my opinion on that.. that- Are you obligated to censor this?

The media outlet had wisely not spelled out what they'd said in response. Leaving Ms Even's dialouge to stand alone and the reader to draw clues from the context.

Yes?

Will I get kicked out for excess profanity?

Yes?

Fine. I can work around it.

That mother- (crap his mother's dead)- oh wait, I got it!


Descriptors had been jotted down. The media analysist had compared her smile to a sharkpedo's, pure teeth and malice.

You can tell that Matron necrophilic, zebrstrike's glutinous gluteus maximas, shipment of expired tauros fertilizer, that if he wants people to stop pointing out inconvenient truths, like the false charity he rattled off last time, he can start by being a decent person first.
Clearly, he had underestimated her.

And if he needs a pointer he can begin by returning the donated funds he demanded be "re-acquired" from Viridian Gens pediatric fund! It, like all donations, is in the public records, incident report-"
Oh wow, so he extorted money from her work and made them "donate" it to him.

To his horror, he realized that she'd memorized the public record code of the charity adjustment. Right down to the page number.

Suddenly, Giovanni really didn't want to go to work. His legal jobs at the gym, and Viridian Co, would be awash in reporters once this got out. And it was out.. the Verdant Star was Viridian's premier reporting resource.
She got him good here!

As for his less than legal familgia affairs...

Hell, if she heard about this, Nona might want to have words. His subordinates, while cowed, had a few lines they'd refuse to cross. Messing with a children's charity might be one of them.

Fuck his life. He was going to have to make calls and release a press statement to publically apologize.
To push him this far... she really pulled out a win here!

Then to add salt to the wound, his phone rang. Caller I.D. confirmed it was Gio Corp, his P.R. was on the line.

In more than one way.

Knowing he'd need something, anything, to take the edge off Giovanni rooted through his fridge. Found something strong, and dropped a dollop in his cup. As he answered, he prayed the shit storm wouldn't be too bad.

Would this be a slap on the wrist? Or hell incarnate?

A few minutes in, after the toned of brimstone and fury were made loud and clear, Giovanni sighed. The chewing out reminded him of Nona, and thinking on that old shrew recalled to him an old Sakaki saw. A saying about God and Sakaki's.

When He created everything, from beast to man to 'mon, He set aside no mercy for Sakaki's.

Damn his life for proving that old yarn right yet again.
Yep, it's going to take him a while to recover from that one. I'll bet this is the first time someone damaged him to this extent.
Closing thoughts for part 2:
Alright, I'm not sure Grace makes for much of a "companion" within the scope of part 1 and 2, but she seems to be the only one who fits that bill, especially since there is no mention of Fabio in this part.

Portrayal of Gio in this part is great! It makes Grace's super effective PR attack all the more impactful too.

Always glad to get some more reviews out there for you, Kasan!
 
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