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About to start redrafting and revising these six chapters, which gives me a handy excuse to finally reply to the feedback y'all have given. Before I do that, some little author's notes on my progress and my intent for future chapters/revisions: It looks like I'm going to end up condensing the...

Ah geez, Blitz has really left me spoiled, hasn't it? :V Here are some review responses. Just in general: there are changes suggested by some of you that I still want to implement that aren't addressed here, but I have noted them and will be sure to put them in when I eventually revise these...

CHAPTER SIX: Return from Elsewhere The two ruby eyes, each as big as a distant moon, belonged to a grey giant the size of a mountain. Its body snaked down from above Florence’s platform to… she couldn’t see where it ended. Its many wings arched from the sides of its back like jagged fingers...

Hey! Thanks for the review. :> Thank you! That first line was definitely my intention; happy that that the bewilderment of it all came across. I'm also happy to hear that the imagery came out clearly. Yeaaaaah, dedicating the first chapter to that was very much a deliberate choice, sadly. :P...

Yo, this is a hell of a comment; thank you so much! :] I'm very glad to hear that this mythos-heavy kind of story is your thing. A fun anecdote, actually; the first time Dragon's Dance got recommended to me, it was after I'd scrapped the first draft of this fic but before I'd started work on the...

CHAPTER FIVE: No Static At All Connor found himself inside another room. What did the architect in charge have for liminal spaces? Mordred wasn’t there, at least. Nor was the suffocating Malice. He appreciated the respite; it gave him room to look around without feeling like death. He sat on a...

CHAPTER FOUR: Arceus Closes a Door, and Opens A Portal The two trainers walked through the unlit corridor until they could no longer see, at which point Florence stopped. Connor nearly walked into her outstretched right arm; she held her piplup firmly with her left. “Sorry,” he whispered...

Well, hi! Thanks for checking this out, even if that was by obligation. Right off the bat, I'm in a funny position here: until reading this I had no idea you could submit other people's stories to Catnip Circle, and there's a reason I hadn't submitted it myself, because I would really rather...

CHAPTER THREE: The Forest Connor’s time in Floaroma wasn’t particularly happy, but that didn’t mean he wanted to leave. In fact, he found himself a little sad that his time in town didn’t let him appreciate how lovely it was. Floaroma was small and quaint in a way that reminded Connor of home...

CHAPTER TWO: No More the Sub-Mariner (Content warnings: strong language, hospitals, mentions of parent death) "Uh-huh. I… see." By the time Connor stopped talking, Dr. Danae Calchas of the Floaroma Medical Centre's psionics ward had long since stopped smiling. Her notes had been taken with the...

Some responses under the cut -- thanks so much for the comments; I'm touched that y'all took such a thorough look at this! I'll try and get chapter 2 posted before the end of the day.

IMPORTANT NOTE, DECEMBER 2022 (FOR BLITZ 4 ONWARDS): THIS VERSION IS OLD AND HAS BEEN DISCONTINUED. I STILL INTEND TO REPLY TO THE OLD UNANSWERED COMMENTS HERE EVENTUALLY AND AM LEAVING THIS THREAD UP FOR POSTERITY'S SAKE, IN CASE YOU WANNA READ AND REVIEW IT, BUT BESIDE IT NOT REFLECTING THE...