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hiya windskull! here for blitz; partying up in chapters 10-13. quick note--I think your table of contents in the front page isn't updated? I was surprised that I only had one chapter to go (ch10 is the last one on there), but that's not the case! chapter 10 Celebi interlude! This can only be...

Hi there! Here for Catnip, and also to catch up. Chapter 9! (I think The Desert Cat and I had a similar set of grammar edits, haha. Do you particularly care for line-by-line feedback like this? I don't want to waste your time on aspects you aren't focused on.) You have an extra hyphen in here...

Chapter Eight! Ironically called race to the finish as I try to race to catch up with your prodigious update rates, fml. This felt a little wordier than normal -- I think "the kirlia whispered" would probably be fine? This ends up being a thing that's been brought up a bunch across the past...

chugging along into chapter seven! WWEHBD, the cool kid's version of WWJD Dropped a quotation mark at the end here. Also! It's pretty rich from Haru aka "have you just tried not eating meat because killing things is barbaric" to be so nonchalant about loss of life here. I feel like the phrase...

Hello! Me again, catching up as the plot thickens. Dropped a comma before 'yes'. Normally you're really good at avoiding this, but the double 'horn' here is a bit repetitive in such close context. lmao this is the best description for the efficacy of Disarming Voice that I've seen (which is...

Chapter 5 Hello, me again! First half of this is unnaturally grammar heavy; sorry in advance. I like this. It's not common (but entirely realistic) for protagonists/narration to follow a chain of logic and yet be completely wrong about something. Adds a nice bit of realism to things. hello it...

I actually read quite a bit further than this chapter, but dropping in a review while the earlier stuff is still fresh. Sorry for falling off the wagon on this one; it was really enjoyable reading up so far! Chapter 4 This... yeah. I get what you mean about adding more obligate carnivore...

Okay! I actually read this on Bulba and can crosspost to there if you'd like. Prologue - I like the broad strokes here. We get a good grasp on how many different places are being called home here; I recognize Nip and Haru but I imagine all of these characters are going to be terribly important...