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🙌 At long last. It is time. So, these are mostly line-by-lines, since I was skimming for new stuff, with some overall thoughts at the end. This one is incredibly short (not a real review, Blitz loggers!) because I skipped to the new beat at the very end: Aaaaaaaand finally! A...

Ch 3.18, here we go! I enjoyed the tension between Grace's dislike of VStar (which, yeah, they seem shitty!) and Cuicatl's reality. Easy to say "go get a scholarship" but maybe not so easy to actually do it and maybe not so easy to make that scholarship worth anything. Then again, she didn't...

Flying 3.17 So, as I said in DMs, I liked this chapter a lot and I think it's my favorite in the last while! (Probably my favorite since ghost bird tea party.) I like the running theme of Gen's parents being worried about her being mind controlled ... because it's not really about that, not...

Finally here for 3.16! Sorry am very slow--brain was juggling a lot this week. I feel like you'd mentioned before that Kukui was going to show up, but I totally forgot and was surprised to see him. Kind of a shame to see him minus the pidgin--my impression of him is dad joke on two legs, so I...

Thank god. I didn’t want to hurt your feeling, but all those humans are so ... ugh, bipedal? Can’t wait to buy a couple volumes for the library! The kids will really like it.

Responding to Flying 3.15: Conversion! No pull-quotes because I read it on my phone the other morning. Just going to leave you with some overall thoughts. Which are mostly: aww, Gen. It's so wretched how clearly Mom thinks she's Helping™️ and how they're not even letting Gen be with her dang...

Noci continues to dazzle and delight, wowowowow. I loved the argument between them towards the end. I guess speaking in monotones doesn't necessarily make you a better liar. Who knew. The idea of waiting for Noci to show up to really start the fight proper is fun. She's like a kid waiting to...

I thought the "ancestor story" was much better integrated into the story this time. Voice of the Moon is a great icetales name! Something about the suffocating with love didn't quite mesh for me, though. This is just an explanation for stillbirths, right? It's hard for me to parse that as...

Jumping in with some line-by-lines and then some meatier thoughts. I'm glad to see that Kekoa is still grappling with the tension between not being a dick and trying to seize the title of champion away from Selene by any means necessary. He's going through some real changes of perspective and...

I appreciated the ADex reroute! Uh oh. It's like when you use code words to talk over the dog's head, and the dog learns that dubbleyuayelkay also = walk. Excellent work, Pix. I wasn't sure which one of them Cuicatl was addressing here? ! Blasphemy. The horror. Good job, Pix. Silly humans...

Kekoa is here feeling his feels. Makani gave him a lot to think about! I appreciate how we get to see your characters puzzle through things. There isn't really one glorious AHA moment, just a long string of one foot in front of the other. You also do a lot to make sure it feels like the rest of...

Hi, I came for the well-adjusted, relaxing, heterosexual times. ☀ I’m just gonna dive right in with my pull-quotes. Haha, fuck this says so much about him. Oof, baby. I misread the ellipsis as a scene break at first and it threw me off. I agree that the daydream was abrupt! I thought she...

Yay, BT is back! I need my fix of sad, wet camping and logistics 4 ever. First, some structural notes: I was definitely thrown by opening a chapter labeled Cuicatl with not-Cuicatl. I think we’ve gotten Mom-flashback before, but I think it would be more digestible if we were grounded in Cuicatl...

Gela is incorrect. Also, you've capitalized pokemon here, and I don't think you usually do. I wasn't sure if this was because darkness or not. It wasn't until later in this chapter that I was sure that the darkness is limited to Alola, and we don't know Gela so I wasn't sure if home for her was...

I’ll give you some quotes first, then some overall thoughts and feelings: LOL, Jesus, Kekoa. In this instance “the blind girl” feels a little harsh and distant rather than it does like ribbing. * There’s no Seems like an obvious yes, which makes this wording a little funky for me. Did we...

👀 A hilariously bad interpretation of Genesis’ departure. Missing commas after well and first, I believe. Pane* But cool visual. I feel like acknowledging the shelter is crowded is too generous for Pixie. I feel like she ought to just complain about too many strange new humans scrëm, scrëm...

Lol oh noooooooooo. I enjoyed the world-building around all of this. Meredith's POV was really enjoyable overall and gave me this vision of an alternate version of BT that's an interconnected set of one-shots and few-shots instead. I don't think it has to become that, but I do think this...

A few line-by-line reactions and then expanded thoughts at the end. 🎵 The choppiness here was a little odd for me. I know it’s a style choice, but I had to reread this line a couple times. I can’t tell if he misheard her (if so, I’d expect her to react!) or if there’s a typo here. LOL Ooh...

Nice to have the gang back and to see what this situation looks like from the perspective of smalltime trainers who aren't champions of anything. Hahaha, this is a classic Persephone moment. For me, lines like this give "her power" too much agency. It's not a conscious entity in and of itself...

Ooh Selene chapter! Nice detail. I was surprised we got so little of Nebby’s thoughts considering her psychic presence is such a big part of things here. But this does set up the urgency and the trust between them. For real. Double “look.” Maybe swap the second one for “shoots a questioning...