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Thank you! Hopefully I'll be a bit quicker with the next chapter.

Book 2 Chapter 5: Seaside Village Absol’s eyes blinked open, and they were back in the warmth and comfort of the library. Mewtwo was seated in the middle of their bed, and she lay between his legs, with her chin on his lap. Arcanine and Zorua flanked them on either side, and Team ACT...

Not really, but I felt like Mewtwo ought to have some explanation for traveling between the worlds. Even though IoC has blatant magic and is obviously fantasy, I guess I'm trying for more of a rational, sci-fi like feel. The main conflict is supposed to be the process of discovery, rather than...

Book 2 Chapter 4: Respite The familiar scents and sounds of the manor, stone and smoke and hot food and dozens of Pokémon working and living together, wrapped around Zorua as the door creaked shut behind them. Zangoose and Sandslash, working on something she couldn’t see on one of the big...

Thanks! It is a bit of a slow start, but I'm glad you're enjoying it so far.

Thanks! There are more chapters coming, some day.

Thank you!

Thanks. I'm working on the next chapter. I really am. Very, very slowly.

Thanks!

Thanks! Rewrote the dream in Chapter 3 based on your feedback, I think it's much more consistent with the later ones, now. I was thinking about shifting them all around to be in chronological order, but...that would put the 8.5k word dream in Chapter 16.5 in Chapter 3, and I feel like that may...

Alright, you've inspired me to rewrite both Zorua and Arcanine's argument at the beginning of chapter 5, and the dream from Strikes Back, which may lead to re-ordering all of his dreams.

Pen and Love – Thank you! There's a lot of great stuff in all these reviews. Some specific responses below, and I appreciate all the other corrections too. Looks like I have a lot of editing to do.

Pen: Thank you! That was a great, detailed review, and you caught some errors that no one else has mentioned. Responses to a few of your comments below. Also, I appreciate all the other spelling and grammar corrections. Off to fix them!

Book 2 Chapter 3: Temple Ruins Several readers recently have mentioned not liking the frequent perspective changes, so I’m trying something different this chapter; one perspective per scene. XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX The sky was heavy with stormclouds the next morning when they returned to Pokémon...

Book 2 Chapter 2: Team Magnezone When they arrived in the manor courtyard the next morning, Arcanine saw that it was nearly clear of the Orrery parts he had helped lay out the week before. The sun sphere rose over them on the west side of the manor, supported by a complex silver lattice...