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Heya, I was going around looking for fics where I had some loose ends dangling to come back to for this final day, and realized that I was one chapter off from getting caught up again with Below. Sounds like as good a reason as any to finish getting current with it, so let’s just jump right in...

Heya. I decided to chip away at my target list of stories to read tonight a bit, and figured that it was as good a time as any to come back to this story. Chapter 12 Well, that was a surprisingly short chapter, so let’s just go ahead and plow on to the next one: Chapter 13 Alright, and...

Heya, it was a bit of a marathon, but I got in a review of Below in time for Review Event after all. Since hey, I had fun with the story for the first 10 chapters, so it sounded like as good a reason as any to polish off that last straggler and get current. Chapter 11 Well, that chapter...

Ah yes, Below, it’s been a while since I crossed paths with you. Though I suppose I did need to get back into things in short order since last chapter was quite the rollercoaster. Now seems as good a time as any to do so, so let’s just right to it: Chapter 10 Though I suppose that this is...

Chapter 9 Probably makes sense to remind the readers that this is a fiery whip and not a literal held object at the moment. Well, I wasn’t expecting that. Though I kinda wonder if you should’ve shown the cogs in Mark’s head turn a bit more for him rationalizing to throw Daisy under the bus...

Chapter 8 Mark: Layla: “ Also, asking repeatedly isn’t going to make us get there faster.” This used to be some sort of transport tunnel, didn’t it? Since the construction sounds very “road tunnel” in description minus the material swirling through the granite. That one I haven’t figured...

Heya, here for a twofer of polishing off a belated Reading Rookidee target and offsite Review Tag. Said Review Tag had covering at least 10,000 words of story as a requirement, so I took the opportunity to go ahead and dive into the next 3 chapters of your story from where I left off: Chapter 7...

Heya, took a while, but I’m here to round out my Reading Rookidee readings by picking up my review series of Below, finally reaching that chapter that you’ve been waiting for me to get to for a while: Chapter 6 Okay, so a bit of a nitpick, but IMO, you want to give some sort of reminder to...

Heya, back for another one of these. Since even if I’ve had a few structural bones to pick here and there, I’ve been having a good time following the misadventures of Team Surface, and my understanding is that I’m about a chapter or so out from the part where the story starts getting really lit...

Okay, so last time, Mark accepted a job from the shadiest-seeming monkeys I’ve ever seen that I’m fully convinced will wind up blowing up in his face in short order. It’s been a while since I’ve reviewed this story, so let’s get back in and see just how much of a disaster things turn out to be...

Heya, back to give a fresh bump review-wise to this thing, since you’ve been a busy bee reviewing my stories, and I figured that I might as well get started on paying things forward, even if it’ll likely take a while: Chapter 3 I did a double-take there. Opening with an in medias res...

Chapter 2 You probably want to describe more of Layla’s reaction there. Mark: “W-Wait, but the text clearly said this was a clueless stance. I thought that I was just asking for an explanation-!” Mark: “Wait, so am I supposed to just stand here, or…? Layla: “No! You’re supposed to attack...

Heya, it took me a while, but I’d been motivated to check out your story after that review you kindly left for me of the Once a Thief Prologue offsite. I took a gander at your summary, and… a subterranean focused PMD, huh? That’s something I haven’t seen since those ancient days back when...