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You know, you had me fooled right up until the bit where Natalie sips margaritas. Even I know that pirates drink RUM AND ONLY RUM. Everything else was completely plausible, of course.

So, Mark's come to jesus moment. I kept seeing parallels to his fight with Natalie at the pipeline, except this time Mark is in Natalie's shoes. He's out of his depth and his body, along with his worldview, is being tossed around and shaken up. But why is this that does it? Why here? Why now...

Chapter 11. The Waterbearer. kind of glad I forgot to review this before, because wow do I need a treat today. This chapter is about the fact that the world can't return normal. It can't, both because it has changed, and because Natalie has. You describe to us the sheer physical and...

This is really the quote that gets to the heart of this chapter's conflict, and more broadly, Mark's character conflict. His view of Hoenn has always been preservationist: he loves Hoenn's pristine natural beauty, and unlike his hometown of Unova, he sees that beauty as being still untarnished...

Brendan's POV feels very effective to me for the way it introduces ambivalence and tension into this cave exploration. If we were getting this from Steven's POV, there wouldn't be any real conflict until the very end, when he'd be sad he can't stay and keep poking at the ancient rock god...

So Natalie and Mark finally have the confrontation the story has been racing towards. I really liked how you handled the back-and-forth of the battle. Mark is clearly more accustomed to and proficient at fighting "real" battles, but Natalie's moments of pushing back made sense. Amelia is a...

This was a gorgeous, dynamic read from beginning to end. Where to start? I thought your choice to switch between Natalie and Mark's POVs was really effective. It moved the chapter in this complimentary way that always gave a sense of forward momentum. Their situations are parallel--both moving...

Oof, Natalie. Well, this one is about ships in the night in both the literal and figurative sense. Natalie and Sinbad are passing each other by in every conversation they have. I like how much this chapter centers on Natalie and her reaction and her working through her feelings about her brother...