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Nice to see the next chapter up! Hope the writing's going well on the next. *afterwards One thing to look out for in dialogue are cases where a character refers to another by name or title. This is called a direct address, and you always put a comma before the person's name. Like here: There...

Hmm, as far as the conversation with Oak goes, I would say simply trimming a little of the discussion of the battle strategies would help. I think you establish that Red knows his stuff, and that he's close with Oak, pretty quickly... once Oak gets around to his follow-up question, I felt like...

Hey, welcome to the forums! Always exciting to see a new story, and I'm fond of dark trainer fics, so I'm definitely interested in seeing where this one goes. I think you did a good job of showing off how this story will be different than a typical novelization of RB, which is important for a...