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Hey Chibi! This is a chapter review up to what's not here, but on Fanfiction. Still, I'm posting it here as well to remind you to maybe. publish. it here. too? Yes! I hope so. Anyway, here's feedback for what I had read at the time, up to chapter 48 to 50. I'll be honest, I was hoping for more...

Nice to be all caught up here for the Book's end. I will say, these last few chapters have been very nice to go through. Unlike a few other segments, I didn't really have any curious hangups or anything of the sort, and in general I really liked going through all those beats. I can tell that...

Hoo boy! I picked a good time to get lost in NaNoWriMo and other catchup activities, because it would’ve been a lot harder had I left off just one chapter later. So, I’m just going to give some broad statements for most of this, save more specific feedback for what’s updated, but overall: Good...

Oh, okay! So that's what we're doing tonight. -- All things considered, this chapter was definitely a sudden change of pace. I think one thing that's kind of interesting about it is, from a narrative perspective and from a blind reader's perspective, this theoretically could have happened...

Opening with Firestorm being shot down. What a shame, though hey, at least he’s getting a lot stronger. It’s interesting to see Swift being the most level-headed one of the bunch. Considering what I know about him, with how he’s generally the most academic and upstanding in terms of doing more...

Cell, cell, cells, room, room... -- Now this was an intense chapter, but in a quieter way than they usually go. This is another instance where first person plays in your favor, because for things that are more difficult to accurately describe, or for things that are more descriptive the less...

Ah, this is an interesting take on Mew. A far cry from the cheerful, playful depiction of most iterations of the species. -- This was a very exciting chapter! All action, with a lot of introspection in the middle for what to do next. Jade was definitely thinking in bullet-time for a lot of...

This was an exciting chapter that didn't take time to dillydally with any training shenanigans this time. Great! And it in general hit a lot of good beats, showed that the team was getting more and more competent with taking and disrupting the Rockets... Yeah. I like where this is all going, and...

Nah it’s a Battle Royale before that was actually invented. -- So, despite this being the chapter with ‘ALL THE PLOT’ I’d argue it was more focused near the end than anything, since, once again, we have more training/battling going on. Now, I’ll admit that we’ve got a small milestone ahead...

Ah, and here we go, another little interlude chapter. I think these have been generally good for the flow of the story, and compared to the opening chapters, I think these were paced a lot better in terms of being able to follow everything and actually getting a good feel for the characters, to...

Ahaha... I think you accidentally spoiled it in-narrative before Jade would have known. -- Okay! So, this was a nice chapter. I liked where you went with it, and as usual, the action was spliced in with development. Obviously the most interesting segment was the part with Mewtwo, and how...

OH COME ON! -- Anyway, that aside, this is an interesting chapter that covers a few story beats in rapid succession. I'll go over those later, but I don't have anything particularly remarkable to comment on other than the fact that this is the first time we see Chibi in a truly vulnerable...

Good progress chapter! You didn't dabble too long with the training this time, either. I think you had a good balance of that, and a bit of world building for how Protect works in this world. That's pretty clever, though thirty seconds, oh boy. I wonder how fast-paced battles go if that's...

Finally, some payoff! Took a while, but this chapter was well worth it, I'd say. We've already got the sabotage mission to thwart Raikou, and I have some overall thoughts about this at the end, but my initial impression of this chapter was a nice little good-job on getting this little arc...

Gonna use this quote to zero in on the fact that this battle gave me serious flashback vibes to literally the chapter before. We had a fight scene opening that one and a fight scene opening this one and aaaa it's just a repeat and it was hard for me to not skim over it. Yeah, they're getting...

So, I feel that the first scene went on for a bit longer than it probably needed to. We’ve kinda already seen fights going on, y’know? But that might just be my bias against repeats of mook fights/training montages. Definitely in favor of summarizing or having them happen offscreen at this...

Jade, you gotta study up a bit more on basic attacks. If the Chinese can learn over 1000 characters as the basics of their language, surely you can learn a couple hundred common techniques! -- Alright, so full disclosure: I liked this chapter a lot more than the previous one, mostly because...

You know, all things considered, I don't think this was a particularly bad chapter as you had been worrying about on discord. Yeah, there was definitely a tonal shift, but I think whatever revisions or adjustments you may have done either now or prior helped to make that shift a bit more...

Gotta catch 'em all, Poke Bombs! -- So, I don't have a lot of overall thoughts on this chapter -- we're approaching another tense action chapter that can more or less be quickly summarized with its action beats. But overall, I thought it was a clever combination of stealth and actual fighting...

I suppose your first half was on the slower side, but I think enough happened in this chapter to make up for it in the second half, all things considered. Overall, I see what you mean about this being more stealth-based than the plane arc. I'm not really sure where it's going to go or exactly...