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Back to review this story again, on a new chapter! I can see that you are improving in your writing. Very good! Keep studying and keep growing. I enjoyed chapter 3. I felt like I got a good sense of the brother's personalities shining through, and got to see how they operated on their first...

First. Good title. Love titled chapters. And I like this one quite a bit! Alrighty! Chapter 2! Now to begin, I say, good job! The overall story here is good, characters solid for the story setting. You've set up an interesting second chapter. We have a pokemon seemingly running to be mayor of a...

Alrighty, *cracks knuckles* time to review chapter 1, revised! For starters, great improvements! This version is definitely better, in my opinion. I can tell you took critique and tried to adapt it, which is great! Opening with the dream is good. Some may say a dream sequence is cliche but...