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A lot of things happened in this chapter, but something I'm really struck with is how Abe is just really scared and concerned for Red right now. This all must be very sad from Abe's perspective, which of course Red would hate but in another world would be a hope for Red having a support system...

Review for Chapter 5 Okay, so I liked this chapter and especially found Red’s character fascinating, but I felt like the pacing was somewhat stretched in a couple places. Firstly, I feel like Red’s emotions jumped a bit too frequently in this chapter. In the beginning, Red had a scare moment...

I’ve noticed throughout the fic that you do a great job describing mundane areas – a grocery store, a therapist’s office, this forest – through Red’s POV to manipulate the mood. Your skill with this kind of scene-setting really sticks out. In isolation I like the Pidgey to call back to the...

Chapter 2 (I actually started writing this back when I first read Chapter 2, but never finished it. Whoops. Anyway...) Hmm, I feel like the conversation between Michi and Yamask could have been optimized. The beginning portion dragged on a little bit; It takes about 700 word for Red to realize...

I really liked the depiction of Red's depression here. I actually related to the monotony and dullness with which Red viewed his life, which was a weird experience because Red is Red. The atmosphere created by Red’s mood was really potent. I especially liked this passage when he enters the...

And I'm back for more Red. I'm glad to be reading Hunter, Haunted since you've been talking about it so much. I wanted to wait until you started posting the updated chapters; now that have, I'll try keep up with each chapter. I read both prologues. Both are good, but overall I think I prefer...