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Thanks for your comment! I'll make a few minor changes but this work's complete. Solid feedback, but I intentionally kept a couple of elements under wraps.

Chapter 42: The Wheels Keep Spinning A quiet late morning, a classic within the art history field, and the finals of a double tournament this afternoon. A great day for Valen, plus he finished typing up the second book within the past week. The quiet part is a bit abnormal. Hilda's out and...

Chapter 41: Accepting One's Strengths The sun sinks into a sea of clouds, the singing of cheers continuing to fill the air. Many chanting one or both of Valen's monikers. Silver isn't just indifferent to whether they cheer him on—he wants every ounce of that cheering to go towards his longtime...

Chapter 40: Hilda Hits a Home Run Rosa hums and jumps around, her long hair swaying as she gathers up the attire she's wearing for today's event. Today's the day of lots and lots and lots of fun, even though that's almost every day. What makes it more awesome is that looks like the cutest boss...

Chapter 39: Tranquility, Tenderness, and Trolling Hilda stands by while Rosa record herself finishing up her latest oil painting, the duo within the patio in Valen's backward. Hilda loves seeing her bestie brimming with confidence over her work. The plot twist of is this play is Rosa's already...

Chapter 38: Two Romantic Soulmates Hilda's eyes gleam at the sight of the written ideas onto her portable table, each paper stacked on top of each other. Now that she's had a scrumptious lunch with seven of her besties, it's time to resume the task at hand. Melanie, Silver, Jacques, Arthur...

Ah, not too surprised here. I've had that Pokemon and melodrama issue before. But I also had an info dumping problem/hard to follow problem. Finding that balance hasn't been easy. I will say that Pokemon do get more involved as the story goes on. I add them to the background to some semblance...

Chapter 37: Planning Within the patio, Rosa trots towards the camera and its stand, excited to record part two of her latest painting video series. She manages to put on her white coveralls while trotting. "Hiiiii, I'm back!" She waves to the camera. She steps backwards, revealing the canvas...

Chapter 36: Encouragement and Kindness The towering skyline of downtown looms large from within this large concrete plaza. The late morning sun illuminates the sparkling dew-drenched grass that surrounds the plaza, as well as Silver's Aggron and his opponent's Kabutops. He's been on a roll as...

Chapter 35: Passion Attraction A chime echoes as Hilda rings the doorbell at Valen and Rosa's residence. Her limbs tingle, a few drops of sweat dripping down her face. She distracts herself by studying the brown door's split-like design. Her gaze moves upwards, fixating on the arch-like design...

Chapter 34: Disclosure Valen leans back against one of his snowy white sofas, noting that Rosa's walk seems longer than usual. Good thing he closed the curtains last night and left it that way, otherwise sunlight would be beaming into the living room. As he rests, he thinks about everything...

Chapter 33: We're All Winners Arthur, Hilda, and Rosa are in the BW Agency's lounge area, sitting in four Kalosian armchairs that encircle one of the large tables. All of the chairs present are finished in black leather upholstery, while each table is finished in dense black ebony wood. Hilda...

Chapter 32: Thoughtfulness It's a sunny mid-morning, and Valen's taking another step towards his brighter future. He relaxes on his bed, having just got off the phone with Dimitri. It's overdue that he resigned from that job. Now he gets why Dimitri had him take an indefinite vacation—he knew...

Thanks for the review! I’ll address what I need to tweak/fix later on, as I’m tired atm. But I will get to it.

Chapter 31: Rui’s Gon’ Give It To Ya! A flock of Pidgey, Pidgeotto, and the lead Pidgeot that soar above in the late morning sky, eyeing the people Pokémon below. Within the light traffic, an orange-haired young woman cruises down a road in a black sedan, the angry growl of its engine roaring...

Chapter 30: The Show Goes On Within the third floor of Valen's house, Gengar's relaxing on a sofa, watching his weekly morning cartoons. He still likes how the attic's been set up. What Valen referred to as the billiard room is big enough for even Salamence to relax in. However, his dragon...

Chapter 29: The Will to Fight The elevator dings, the automatic doors opening. Hilda, Rosa, Melanie, Valen, and Arthur step out, the doors closing behind them seconds later. All of their Pokémon have been recalled back into their balls, with the exceptions of Gengar, Absol, and Umbreon. Hilda's...

I had to work on his character a lot more than I expected, but I think he's improved. Yeah, that's been tricky. I've had to cut info due to info dumping before. Nevertheless, I appreciate the review/feedback.

Chapter 28: BW Agency The mid-morning sun beams down over Valen and Rosa's neighborhood. Melanie and Hilda stroll down the cobblestone sidewalk, their Absol and Umbreon walking in front of them. The chirping of various bird Pokémon echo around Melanie and Hilda, the duo chatting with Silver via...

Thanks for the review. I’ll fix up the opening sense. The thing is that the story’s present tense. While I can still try to fix it, the suggestion you gave for that quote is in past tense.