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Chapter 14 Learning and Discovery Clouds of deep purple and blue shift and overlap but never form. A sea of stars drifts among them in tranquil peace. Two voices speak in the distance: Mark’s own, and a feminine voice, who sounds like an old friend. “A Sableye,” she says. “You’re okay with...

Chapter 13 What Should Not Be Forgotten Mark buries his head into his arms. He shakenly sucks in air. Layla jerks his shoulders around. “Mark! Please answer me! What’s wrong?” He curls up harder. “Nothing! Nothing’s wrong! We’re not in any danger, I’m sorry. I just had a memory. There’s a lot...

I’ll be uploading in smaller chapters from here on out. After writing a bit of Into the Moon, I realized short chapters are significantly more encouraging for me, especially considering I got burned out writing chapter 11. I’m not writing less - I’ll just divide the content up into smaller...

Chapter 12 What Should Stay Forgotten I need to stay calm. Mark ran away from a crimson glow bathing the backs of camouflage-clad soldiers and crumbling concrete buildings lining the street. They stamped over debris and fallen comrades while shouting and screaming. Pokemon joined them...

Chapter 11 Memories Lost to the Void They walk for a long while since Jace agreed to the new condition to raise Millie until she can be reunited with Daisy on the surface. It's been silent since Layla needed time to flush out complicated emotions. She squeezes Mark’s hand tightly throughout. He...

You're not the only person to call it "Metro 2033 with Pokemon". Someone else who is a fan of this story brings it up often too, to the point they even streamed the game yesterday because of how this fic reminded them of that game. I never actually played the games much though, I was surprised...

I just wanted to mention I updated chapter 10. Jace was coming off as uncharacteristically inhumane, so I tried to fix it. Originally chapter 10 wasn't even necessary until I realized there was no way Jace was going to get away with the plan he had so I haven't had the time to think the...

Chapter 10 Trusting a Miscreant The gang trudges down the winding, black-and-white tunnel lit by the light of the fire-types' flames. Most walk silently, robbed of the ecstasy of domination. The chatter of the remaining guild members is loud and blissful as a rescued family is still a joyous...

Chapter 9 Trapped in Hell Layla chokes under the Combusken’s pressing talon. Her face turns red like the blood dripping down the claw marks on his leg. Mark shakes his shoulders to get the two captors off him but their hold tightens. The Salazzle cracks her whip, the tip gracing inches away...

Chapter 8 No Innocence Anywhere The tunnel zigzags endlessly. Mark wishes he knows how many hours pass just turning around and walking up endless inclines. When he asks, Layla only mentions they’ll be there “eventually.” The tunnel provides distraction for Mark, at least. The ceiling is a...

By the way, chapter 6 has some new art you should check out if you've been following each chapter of my story!

Chapter 7 Hush Mark shifts Millie around, getting a comfortable hold on her. Two torches lie at his feet, neither of which illuminates the black structure wedged into the glittering crystal. Layla wiggles the flash-drive key into a terminal standing to the side of the structure’s door, but it...

Thanks very much for the review! It was fun to read you roleplay with my characters, I'll have to review Once a Thief ;) (shame I'm a slow reader and made promises to read a million different fictions :s ) I feel the biggest thing I got from your reviews is that I write reactions strongly...

Chapter 6 Swallowed by Darkness The minerals in their torchlight’s reach show a darker indigo hue this far down. The chaotic galaxy of glitter below never lets up no matter how deep they descend. Crystals stop crossing in convenient spots, which cause the pair to backtrack occasionally. They...

Chapter 5 Heated Competition Mark sees a purple-and-blue void shifting around, never making form. Two unclear voices reverberate in the distance: Mark’s own voice and a feminine voice. Time passes, and they become discernible… "What do you enjoy most on quiet nights? Reading a book? Starting a...

Chapter 4 Guild Members “This Aipom is offering me a mission. He just wants me to be on lookout while he does… something?” Mark tells Andy. Mark glances at the Aipom; he’s forcing a frown while his tail waves in careless arcs. “You said he only needs to know you’re off with me,” Bali says. His...

Chapter 3 Scrap Town “Aaaa!” Mark shouts. His purple arms scramble in front of him, bracing to impact against the cave floor a foot below him. Yet, he doesn’t fall. “There, I knew that’d wake you up,” a familiar voice says. Blood pumps through his body and his senses come to. The ground looms...

Chapter 2 Team Surface Mark takes a deep breath and walks to Layla’s side. He holds his arms up in a clueless stance. “Thank you…” Layla whispers. The Flygon growls. She launches towards Layla, rearing a swipe. Layla meets this attack by throwing a spore from her bag that pops in the dragon’s...

Hey, thank you Fists! This is the first big review I got that goes into the nitty-gritty, and it's not actually as terrifying as I thought it'd be. I appreciate it! Stuff like contractions wasn't something I thought about and I probably do have a blindness to redundancy. You also have a good...

I hope I'm doing everything correctly - I'm new here! There's also one more note I want to leave but I didn't want to put in the first chapter: The first chapter is a recent rewrite - the next few chapters are older and therefore will be of lower quality, but it'll bounce back up. I'll try to...