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Chapter 41 My brain really wants the comma there after "Alright". Also really wants a semicolon for that first comma. First person can definitely play a bit fast and loose with comma splices but in this case I feel like it'd just add clarity? :sadwott: Love her being reminded of that here...

Chapter 40 Nice. All according to his plan, eh? Oops, kind of a significant omission there. I enjoy that Stalker is a person to whom "I still need to utilize his strength for my plans" is simply a reasonable response to "Let my brother go." Obviously he's not doing that, because then his...

Chapter 39 Moltres's chosen, ladies and gentlemen I like this description, particularly the anxiety worming through my insides. And then Jade goes on to not tell them about it. That's pretty interesting. Jade isn't scared of what will happen if she tells them or anything, just thinks about...

Chapter 6 This was a pretty intense chapter! They barely get to start to say goodbye (awww, Neo) before Phenac goes into lockdown, something's hugely fishy about the city guards, and then three Shadow Pokémon (and two others) are attacking them at once. It definitely felt like it went by...

Chapter 5 I'm realizing now that I think I completely misinterpreted what was going on in Novo's scene at the end of the last chapter. In Wes's final scene they're still at the Outskirt Stand eating breakfast, talking about going to Phenac City, and then in Novo's scene he talks about suffering...

Chapter 3 I wasn't expecting the next chapter quite so soon, so this was a pleasant surprise - I'd already gotten started on reading OSAS yesterday, but figured I'd come back to this now. Still enjoying the worldbuilding you're casually laying out here - Pokémon battle states, Pokéballs...

Chapter 4 New POVs! I enjoyed Rui's POV and how confused she is by Wes's behaviour; it sure would be puzzling without having been in his head. (I actually had to go back and reread a chunk of the previous chapter to recall what had forced him to do this, since it has been far too long since I...

Chapter 2 Enjoying his reasoning here, that he's privileged so he should shut up and eat his soggy Lucky Charms. I know, right, who would kill and eat humans [sidelong look at Red] Love this - he does sense auras, just not know the language. More euphemisms! I don't think there's actually...

Chapter 2 There's a lot of great visceral sensory detail in this chapter; I can practically feel the cold rain as Steven tries to distract Kyogre. Little things like trying to hold onto Skarmory's rain-slicked wings, etc. It all just sells the action scene, and the action itself is beautiful -...

I wasn't really going to read this but I clicked it just to see what it was and then I did, whoops. I quite enjoyed the imitation of Negrek's style here, to start with; I think you've got some very Negrek-ish descriptions and turns of phrase in here, and there are some quite amusing Salvage...

Chapter 3 Enjoy Salem's relatable awkwardness - seeing the morphs and realizing they're all like her, wanting to wave but hesitating a bit too long. Dusk *grinning like a human who had grown up doing it*, with almost a note of jealousy to it. Salem's whole initial interaction with Dusk is...

I'm going to throw in a recommendation for @kyeugh's tarnishing, since it hasn't been done yet. Each chapter is a short but focused snapshot of the life of a canon character we all know, each giving a piece of the puzzle of who they eventually become and why. There's a lot to the story despite...

Chapter 1 This was a super intriguing opening! I've been wanting to read more of your work since the Friends and Partners contest results, but AQ in particular was of course a more in-depth introduction to your Steven, and you've talked about this particular fic being whumpy. So when it came up...

What a lovely, heartbreaking chapter. Silver's already very much becoming recognizable as the Silver we know, permanently on the defensive after all the cruel lessons she's learned from her life so far. Loved Professor Elm; he's so genuinely good, just wants to help this obviously troubled kid...

I'd been looking forward to reading this since you posted it, and I'm glad to have gotten the chance for Blitz! Covering chapter one for now, but definitely hoping to return to it. I thought you did a great job characterizing Andre; there's a lot going on in his head, with interesting bits and...

Ahhh, there’s the piece I was missing. I took the feeling she couldn’t describe, that she felt back then even though it didn’t make any sense and then feels again now, to be fear, the sense that he might actually hurt her if she abandoned him, triggered by the strange tone in his voice that she...

This was good read - very creepy, good twists, lovely minimalist writing immaculately structured. I liked the dungeon here and the unsettling vibe you went for in portraying the game's mechanics - the stairs that aren't stairs when you look back, the sense in the monster house that if you just...

For good measure, my current works that are eligible in week 3 are: Go - What if Pokémon Go was secretly created to prepare Earth for an interdimensional accident where Pokémon become real? Sutoraiku Legends - The sequel to the highly acclaimed Scyther dating sim, Sutoraiku High. (Playing the...

Glad this got posted! I've been wanting to read this since you were talking about writing a fic for the contest. The first chapter was a great, harrowing read. There's lots of good background worldbuilding in the TV battle, and oh, the irony of Gemma idolizing Red, the trainer who unknown to...

Thanks a lot for the reviews, all! Going to respond to some things where there were open questions or I had some rambling to do about it, but everything else is also much appreciated and taken on board <3 I'm glad this worked well for you! I wanted it to be very clear how much Kari genuinely...